Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20170122225803/@comment-28428152-20170122231037

Ummm... Don't know why there are an overabundance of rather irritating text boxes....

Please try to ignore any spelling or grammer mistakes, as this is just a rough draft. I just want input on how the story itself could be better. Though, I do already have a few in mind, such as adding a younger brother who died, and then making the Nameless take the shape of the dead brither to further torment Ben. I'm also going to change the paunting of Ben from him lying with a dog to one of him chained to a wall, for reasons shown in the second part. It was originally going to be a standalone story, but I just couldnt shake the feeling that there was more I could do to expand upon tge Nameless. So I decided to make it a trilogy, with each part focusing on a different character. Part two is converted from a story idea I'd had before. I've drafted about half of the second part, which will probably be about twice as long as this one. To give the series actual meaning instead if just having it be a one-dimensional story, I decided to make the Nameless represent trauma, with tge first part being the loss of a loved one, the second part being the emotional turbulence of rape (never explicitly describes it, dont worry) and the third part being the guilt of murder.