Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32845126-20180114165911/@comment-24101790-20180114182356

I'm sorry, but this is going to need quite a bit of work.

There really isn't a lot to build off plot-wise here other than a general concept which has been used quite a bit already ("I don't have a lot of time left to write this, but I'm going to spend this time doing that rather than trying to escape or find a way to fight back.").

This concept worked in Lovecraft's stories like Dagon and The Hound because the protagonist has no other option left (and the author showcased their hopelessness) other than to write and wait for the inevitable. Here it feels more like a mini-excerpt into a story that you haven't finished writing or made engaging enough to stand on its own.