Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5614678-20160717051943/@comment-5614678-20160718151129

This is an absolutely awesome critique. It's extremely useful and I will redraft my story accordingly.

But, if it's not too much trouble, could you put the part you wrote in bold? It'll be easier to tell them apart from had I wrote. If you can't/don't feel like doing that I understand, and I'll work on it from there.