Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20150923201343/@comment-27012445-20150926013814

You are absolutely correct. Mr Bear was my inspiration. I can see now how similar the villains are now. I tried really hard to differentiate the two and make the character mine. Having said that, your feedback gave me an awesome idea for fixing that. I will also work on the ending. I didn't make it clear that Jaime was the fourteenth victim and it was ambiguous from the text if the special reunion meant she was alive or he still had the corpse. Nailing the conclusion is really a struggle. If the reader is confused at the end and has any question about Matthew's intension, the story is a failure. The heart of the story is a victim conquering evil with evil in order find justice for himself and the others.