Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20140817035754/@comment-24381191-20140818120511

Umbrello wrote: Teenagers pick the worst places to hang out. But it was eastern Long Island where there is NOTHING to do if you're not into sun and surf. So of course we got drunk and high in weird places. The worst place they took me to was the Montauk Project. Imagine walking around an abandoned military facility that's rusted and decaying, in the middle of the night. [I might add this paragraph to the story] Then we went up to the roof of the tallest building there, and I'm afraid of heights. The roof was even sloped in a way to make you slide off. That's why in the story, Melanie had to assure me I couldn't fall off the roof of the empty house. Then one guy starts telling us stories about how there's people who live there in the tunnels and will attack you if you're alone and you traspass in certain areas. He said one time his dog went into one of the tunnels, and when it came out it was bleeding from what looked like a stab wound (I think he made it up). As we were leaving, people kept saying they heard something in the woods (obviously animals, but it was really scary, lol). Not a fun evening. Maybe I'll write a pasta about it and actually have the tunnel people attack us. It might be too much like the movie Chernobyl Diaries, though. Just without the radiation. Yeah, it could use some more development at that scene, but other than that, it's still pretty good.

Not to get off-topic, (and I hate going off-topic, on my recent WW thread me and one guy had a six message long convo and potential advise-givers [?] would think I have enough critique already, see! I'm off topic again!) but the Montauk Project looks pretty cool to me, I'd love to go there. I love urban exploration, and I'm not into sun and surf either. But I'm afraid of heights as well, and I get really scared on roller coasters or ferris wheels, but my parents think all that ferris wheel thing is nonsense (parents never understand, do they?).