Talk:An Evening Walk/@comment-25052433-20150813232857

This was very good for a first draft. I didn't notice any major grammar issues, so you clearly took your time and made sure it was right. Nicely done.

Nothing really to critique, this was an enjoyable read. I think 1st person may have been the wrong choice of tense, as it begs the question, "how are you telling me the story if you're trapped on a haunted city block," but still, this was a well executed story.

You achieved some great imagery and mental effects, with the strange echo and you did a good job of creating a sense of lonliness and dread in a story set in a neighborhood.

All around, this was a good story, keep writing.