Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27018401-20141230181135/@comment-27018401-20141231072742

Aeternum Nox wrote: Interesting. A few grammatical and spelling errors. I like the repition of the story at the end, though a tad cliche. It adds to the creepy factor. The dialogue could be formatted better, but I guess that's a personal preference. The conversations sound a little forced in some areas, namely the beginning. There are a few cliches, but not necessarily detrimental ones. The necklace seems to come off unrelated almost because the narrator doesn't need it. If he was the only survivor, that could've singled him out. I like the historical background bit. That was a nice touch. Could use a little refinement and cleaning in areas, but overall? Well done. :) Thx for the feedback :D