Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180819032430/@comment-33488654-20180822023730

Xernhacks wrote: Oh my god, I got bored reading the mindless filler of paragraphs only to find something that wasn't even scary. Please, don't add so much detail.

I think it's an okay concept but I don't know how it can even be scary. Killing everyone, so much swearing that isn't even needed. It doesn't make the story better. It makes you look like you're trying to be funny. Oi, can you review my draft?