Talk:Jeff the Killer 2015/@comment-32215496-20170606055053

This is way better than the original, you atleast described why Jeff was so hateful, and finally, Lui didn't die! He didn't need to die, but if you would've put this in an artical form, this would've worked better. Questions would be formed, leading to mystery and interest, and Lui surviving and knowing what happened would fit perfectly. This gave me more of an odd 90s movie though, I'm not scared nor creeped out, and that's a problem. I'm not scared because Jeff has no reason to go after me, he doesn't even know me. Why would he kill anyone else when he's probably just going to kill Randy, and his friends along with the cops that were involved and be done with it unless he finds a joy in pain in general.

I rate this story 7/10

You could've done so much better if you would've done it in different format. Also, try doing some research on serial killers, no offense, but you clearly only researched what's going on in their heads and only a small top layer of their trauma. The story over all was a borderline cliche, try doing research on different traumas involving parents in general.