Talk:Excromation/@comment-26501392-20150716035410

a couple points I'd like to make if you would: one the use of literally twice in sentences beside each other really takes away from the flow of the story.

two the assumption that all these people would commit acts of such depravity seems too suited to be of human nature as I'm sure a great deal of people rather than just some would rather commit suicide rather than resort to acts of cannibalism and one would imagine that families would team up against neighbors rather than each other as familial ties are not so easily broken.

Finally a WMD(weapon of mass destruction) has a fail-safe in place in case of just such an event (the two man rule). even if the spy was the president he would still need the approval of someone else to launch such a powerful weapon

just some tidbits to keep in mind I did enjoy the story though ^_^ with work it can become even better. 5/10