Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20160413174929/@comment-4893169-20160416200907

Thank you MrDupin. Hopefully, the second draft of this will be done by tonight. I'm trying to get rid of the information that's irrelevant to the story like the sister going through eleven hair dye jobs in a four week span or that the dad is a licensed, qualified electrician who knows a lot about the old house's electrical problems. I also added a bit more backstory about the previous owner's hoarding problem and why she really kept large piles of crap and stray cats around (it's for a supernatural reason, a sort of monster deterrent, like a moat).

So the creature wasn't a pet, but a pest.