Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180615171904/@comment-35711173-20180615180128

BloodySpghetti,

I am probably misreading it but what I see is a guy with some issues (PTSD, alcohol?) who has nightmares of middle ages plague time and is micro sleeping and hallucinating things like a woman in a late 19th-century dress. He may be detoxing and have the DT's. We all know the wonderful things you see when you have the itchy bloods. Then he might actually have the beginnings of the plague or it may be another hallucination - which we aren't sure.

The words "suffering from Nyctophobia" is a lot less approachable to people who don't know medical terms than "afraid of the dark." It's also a lot more letters even if it is one less word.

You've got some grammar issues too. In three paragraphs from the end, the last sentence, you have an arm that is itching. Not your armpit but the arm itself. I am sure you'll get them fixed though.