Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29709755-20160821074606/@comment-28266772-20160828170434

Colossal improvement. I really feel like the story does a great job of handling everything as is. Only recommendation is that the scene with the talking slug is a bit plain, and given the subject matter I thought that the protagonist should probably have had a more... emotional reaction. It's just that I know I would if blood slugs started talking to me.