Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24490614-20150625035334/@comment-24490614-20150626224042

I fully appreciate it, like I mentioned I was severely exhausted when I wrote it to begin with (a month of having a broken AC with 100 degree F temperatures will do that to you). Mostly I was pounding out a rough draft and then wanted to see what strengths that would have. I had initially thought about adding the journal tags but didn't know if it would add to or detract from the story, same thing with the explanation of the Rhizo. I know many will know of the cordyceps fungus thanks to "Last of Us" I just didn't know if the Rhizocephalan would be as well known. I know that this shares some qualities with "Last of Us" mainly due to the mind control nature of the infection method. As for the abruptness I was trying to alude to the infection slowly keeping the reader unaware and afraid of what it could be. I highly appreciate all the critiques and I hope you'll be looking for the revision in the near future. Thank you again for your insight, and don't worry about sounding too harsh, I'm not the easily offended type.