Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-6822927-20190302175109/@comment-9041013-20190302214600

There's a bunch of holes in your plot, mainly the one that is "what's supposed to be horror related here?"

We'll get to that in a bit, though. First a few questions, why do the townsfolk hate Rachel, the Murrays or even travellers? Why does Rachel have insomnia, why does she walk around at night? Why on earth does she go into the woods at night? These things either have no purpose or exist to simply serve the plot. If these points weren't there - your plot wouldn't work.

The thing is these plot points are well not good.

Now back tot he scare factor, what is meant to be scary here? The smart looking cat... ehhh... cats are apex predators and are actually smart with smart glances. So, nothing really creepy in there.

A deformed baby? sure, but why does this woman who knows the tails of changelings and other fairies and what not picks up this monstorisity? Let's say she doesn't believe in the legends, why doesnt take it to a medical facility? It clearly isn't healthy.

Basically it's a lot of filler, no real scares and nothing of importance happens in terms of shifts in the plot.

Might as well make her walk in the woods start nice, go completely crazy with her seeing things, hearing these and what not culminating in her finding the baby and thinking for a while that it's normal, before she realizes its not and then has a moment of binding of Isaac (wanting to kill it, or just throw it back into the wild) before giving the idea up and opting to take it back home or something. This could tie into her witch rumors point.