Talk:The Power Went Out/@comment-9041013-20160408190039

While its written decently, there are some issues with this pasta, for me at least.

You've used to stereotypical "learning beast" type of thing for your protagonist. Maybe, just maybe because Ive been watching "Aliens" before reading this it reminds me of an Alien using Jason Voorhees' body as a feeding ground due to your description of it (everything after the period didn't really bother me, just wanted to share). You've kept on going with the stereotypes of becoming injured mid runaway from a monster, and most you've used the so-unbelievable survival method that's called "STAB THE MOTHER FUCKING THING WITH A KNIFE EVEN IF ITS SOME KIND OF ORGANO-METALIC ALIEN WITH VITALS IN ITS BUTTOCKS"

I'll be honest, I was eating a sandwich and this didnt even make me slow down so i'll give you

6/10 :)