Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24841494-20140320153917/@comment-24841494-20140321034434

Devincooper64 wrote: The writing feels choppy and akward, especially when you try to describe the man and the assasin. I would try to stretch out the sentences in the first paragraph and second paragraph to get some flow going so its not soo choppy. Thanks, I will work on that.