Talk:The Emotional Cities/@comment-24281984-20150106160920

I enjoyed this pasta. Sure, the writing was a little choppy and could be a bit more detailed, and he introduction to the "cities" could also be shortened a little. Once we do get there, though, it feels like an interesting and kind of a scary concept to think this is all just going through the MC's mind. Admittedly, the ending doesn't really build up to anything that special, I would like to have seen what becomes of the protagonist after all this and the cycle just repeating again really doesn't do it that much justice.

Still, that being said, you did a good job on this. It kept my interest once it had it and I felt geuninley interested on what was going to happen to the MC. I would suggest rewriting this a little, but only to eliminate a few less-than-necessary sentences here and there and perhaps change the ending a little? As is, though, it's good. Fairly original, fairly interetsing and fairly creepy.