Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25825682-20150202040754/@comment-25477067-20150204210858

Some things that made no sense were things like: The entire scene in the beginning with the video of his friend dying. I see no reason to include that. I read quite a big chunk of it before stopping and nowhere does it come up again. Maybe I didn't read all they way to the big reveal. The different things that happen to him: flooded room,strange noises, hypntizing through a cell phone, being stalked are disjointed. There is a fine line here. You can have strange things happen to him, but you need to both explain and keep vaugue. You don't want to give a full account or give them nothing. You have to gve them just enough to keep a reader satisfied but not enough to ruin suspense.