Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37482493-20190226165738/@comment-36627132-20190226203719

Spelling and Grammar Issues: First off, since it is an organization you should always keep both starting letters in "Animal Anecdotes" "a new group of cops" using the word "new" implies there was already a group of cops there before.

Plot Issues: First off, using animal cruelty as shock factor is not a good idea. Normal Porn for Normal People was heavily censored because the subject of animal cruelty violates Wikia/FANDOM's terms of use. Seecond, your main character is supposed to be someone we identify with, making him a psycho who enjoys animal abuse makes us root for whoever/whatever is after him. "If you don’t know what an anecdote is it is a story." anecdote is a well known word, there is no reason to explain what it means. If a person doesn't know what it means they should look it up.

Plot Issues: The story is lacking in detail. You never explain what is going on, where the main character is, or how the chimpanzee got there. Second, having an ape attack is what happened in Normal Porn for Normal People which I'm sure many will call you out on. "What was even stranger was the fact that chimpanzee never left the building, but a new group of cops that came later never found the chimpanzee." Well either he left or he didn't.