Talk:It Won't Matter If I Kill Him/@comment-25037895-20140815112144

[The guilty hung high can not loose the hold of death on a soul.] I'm not sure which you were trying to convey but either way this sentence is lacking a verb. "Loose" is an adjective. As in, that nail is loose.
 * ...lose the hold of death on a soul.
 * ...loosen the hold of death on a soul.

Also there's this: [when they first realize that there is no way to win this game but to finish it.]<-- Here its all a game.

[I take out some garden sheers and finish the job.]<-- and here its not. This feels very generalized and sort of generic... like really gruesome one-liners that don't really make a storyline.

More examples of this generalizing plot:

[What do you think I am, an amateur?]

[That would take all the fun out of it.]

[Whatever your karma has in store for you.]

The ending makes this story seem incomplete in a way also.