Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27905100-20160404181825/@comment-28060931-20160404203016

I liked the idea, though it was a bit generic, just a another serial killer who was psychologically and mentally abused. However, this easily remedied by going into alot more detail about the character. Also the hearth beating at 250rpm is oddly specific. I also think you should add more suspense to the story.

Thruth be told I'm a bad critic thats why I'm only offering a only a bit of criticism, in fear of making the story worse. All that I said above stood out to me, when it comes to issues. I sincerely hope you get this on the main wiki.

Regards,

-Jake