Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10319977-20151014231140/@comment-10319977-20151014231620

An admin did give me proper criticism for one of my micropastas. Here is an update for "A Wall Is Broken" to further explain the fourth wall break:

"I hopped into my time machine just minutes before Earth was engulfed by a black hole. I was in a hurry, so I crash landed only a couple days into the past. I've been trying to spread word of what happened, to warn everyone, even on literature websites like this one."

I'd like thoughts on this attempt at a fix. I'm not sure how else I could try and break the fourth wall here. I'm willing to scrap this micropasta if need be.