Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25809221-20160313071129/@comment-25809221-20160319155521

Thanks, both of you. I'll be sure to make those small revisions. I agree the needles should be more "scary", so I'll try to give that some work. Unfortunately I had to keep this to two pages and censored for class, but I have no such restriction now. Time to go wild with details after disgusting detail!

BTW, don't worry about it Nathan. If you have any other thoughts feel free to add them, or even just ideas or minor gripes. Every little bit helps.