Talk:I'm a Sane Babysitter/@comment-25052433-20140830165111

Ok, time to call the babysitter and ask how much she'll charge to babysit this review.

What went right:

-Good description and length on the overall descriptive piece. You really did find the sweet spot for the perfect balance of content and action. This was a good read, that was short enough to keep my attention, but long enough to keep me entertained.

-The 'blanket game' concept was perfect. Very scary. It captured the essence of the unknown quite well.

What the Babysitters Club deemed to be unacceptable:

-You had a good deal of grammatical errors here. A lot of it came from not proof reading and checking on grammar standards.

-I changed the 'creepypasta' reference to 'internet horror stories.' This isn't a grammatical error as much as just a pet peeve of mine. Of course, feel free to edit it back if you choose, but for whatever reason I just find referencing Creepypasta, in a Creepypasta, to be the height of lazy plot devices. (Kind of like when Stephen King put himself in the Dark Tower saga. As much as I love that series, I hate the fact the King made himself a character..)

-The ending was very rushed. You used the very last paragraph to introduce the antagonist of the story, and that was it. To me, it seemed as though your spent a lot of time writing a really great story, and at the last minute ran out of time or something, and just summed it all up in a small paragraph that explained nothing. I would suggest you go back and expand on that.

Otherwise, this was a great scary story. Like I said before, that 'blanket game' concept was amazing, and very, very frightening. Excellent work on this all around.