Talk:Peter's Shadow/@comment-3541151-20150209230542

Albeit original, the story lacks maturity and quality. Honestly, I can see this setup working because it's WAY more interesting than most CRAPPYPAS-Oh, sorry, Lost Episodes, but the execution is WAY to hooky.

You see how bad you are story?! You made me capitalize "way" twice! Shame on YOU!

I think I understand the wrap up, and if so, Hi diiscount Penpal!

I'll end my review saying:

The story isn't very good. It lacks substance, and although it's short it still needed more. Having a clever concept isn't an excuse for lazy writing. While thiis is F minuus materiel,, it's not the worst thing I've read, and Ii give the concept points for keeping my interest, but practice writing is important, and you clearly need to 3/10