Talk:My Daughter Loved Lions/@comment-31288135-20180520065148

Ngl this story feels a lot like 1999 or Barney. The lack of description really brings it down and makes the decent twist feel like it comes out of nowhere or has no real impact. The twist also comes too early and the last half doesn't do a lot to help the story. If it had more description and proper build-up, I think it could be really good but right now it's just kinda "eh."