Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181128205448/@comment-9041013-20181129160933

Here are some suggestions that I think can help you tie all the loose ends I came across, I hope;

- Instead of the casual idling of the boys, how about making the hunting scenes more graphic? I had this computer game years ago where you're a hunter for hire and the whole game is a bunch of hunting missions on various animals, now aside from half of them including tracking few different beasts on a large map, you'd also have to hit certain vital spots and such for the perfect score. Anyway, one of the rewards in the game was a visual for a particularly good looking shot. You'd get a short animation of how the bullet leaves your gun, flies through the air and drops the animal, or wounds it. It looked pretty neat for a 2010ish game with relatively shitty graphics. You could include more descripting shooting or full hunting sequences. Yours are descriptive, but they hit the climax of the acitivity and it is merely mentioned "I shot it", "He shot it"... "the animal dropped"

- Tie in the Spirits/cryptids earlier,  you know how after the food runs low they go hunting, so the first time they should hunt on a walk's worth of distance, the second trip should be a more daring one; they take the car and drive around, during this time they see something large moving in the bushes near them for a while. Nobody can tell what it is until a patch of fur is visible... and the rest you can figure it out.

- in relation to the previous suggestion, try to point out a possible explanation for their super invulnerability, perhaps one of the boys decides to shoot the creature after making its general shape only for the bullet to seemingly hit nothing as the beast disappers into a thicker part of the forest.

- Don't like the super smartness of the beasts, me says, let them tear up the whole front and only the two front tires. (You already have a mention of how there's one spare tire only)

- I'm gonna guess it's his journal, or a piece of paper, so finish the last sentence with a full word, perhaps with the "the".

- Definitely add a half serious cameo by the owner of the shack, possibly for him to run away once he notices something left by the beasts, be it the claw marks or the shape of the feces (like Wombat have unique feces or something)