Talk:That Girl's Blog/@comment-27336567-20180513010110

Okay, first of all, don't tell people this is your first creepypasta. That already taints people's view before they read the story.

As for the actual story, the actions and thought process of the protagonist aren't realistic, like messaging a random stranger to meet up, or not seeing the multiple and very short relationships as a red flag. Also, if this girl is posting about these guys she's been killing on her blog, wouldn't someone make a connection between her and the disappearances, and look into it? Finally, the call from the friend at the end is a bit too ambiguous. Overall, the pacing is way too quick and there's no real buildup of suspense.

It's a solid concept, but I'd reccomend a complete rewrite.