Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25947144-20150614164217/@comment-26030957-20150614192908

Well that was a very well researched report, but what I had in mind was a depiction of a scene. I want to be there. I want to see Vlad, hear Vlad. Take us there, if just for a brief moment. There is a famous story of Vlad eating lunch by the rotting corpses of his impaled victims and one of his generals can't bear the stench and begins to gag, so Vlad impales him as well. Something like this scene, written like a narrative not a history. If you want to get all NSFW describe in great detail how  they slide the spears up their victims ass, the moans of pain as they are violated, and then their howls of agony as the point rips up into their bowels and out their chests. The smell of the excrement and piss, the rot of festering flesh. Birds swooping down to peck out their eyes. I wouldn't worry about making it too long, just a horrible scene, and try to think of a creepypasta twist ending. Maybe after all the horror someone makes a funny joke, or Vlad thinks to himself, "My good works will one day be rewarded," something with a twist, you know? You've obviously done your research and know your stuff, now use that knowledge to tell us a little story set in that time. Don't rush it. Take your time. Think it over and over and over. When you've got it written out go back and pepper it with tiny details like the way they dressed, their mannerisms, the smells, the sounds. Look up words they would have used and speech patterns they would have followed. Your off to a great start and I see the potential here for a great pasta. Mr. Dupin loves historical pastas. If he likes it he will blog about it and get the word out there, so spend some time thinking and make it good. Before you post it to the wiki be sure to put it back here and message me, I'll give it a proof read for you and tell you what you think. I can't wait to see what you come up with. Oh, and one more thing, remember en media res, or start in the middle of the action. Beginning the story in the middle of action will draw the reader in.