Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25196212-20140723003632/@comment-25148755-20140723011007

Yeah, this is really pretty bad. Its a whole bunch of cliches strung together and just doesn't really work. Maybe, maybe, it could be saved, but that'd take a massive overhaul and the end result really wouldn't look much like what you started with. It did scare the crap out of me when the narrator clicked the link in the first email, but only because I was afraid of all the malware he had just opened himself up to.