Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150423072004/@comment-28938497-20150424090932

This definitely isn't cliche, though it is...underwhelming. The 'twist' lacked real punch. Maybe a bit more description would work, but even then, there were no expectations built up to flip on their head. Maybe add that before he enters the basement he notes how many pictures of a happy family there are, or something to that effect.