Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31294034-20170215180000/@comment-28428152-20170216212829

My biggest issue is that you reffered to the cat as "it." While technically grammatically correct, I think you should apply a "him" or "her," seeing as animals aren't inanimate objects. I also think maybe you should add some more flair to it, because it doesn't keep the reader's attention very well. Also, why would someone watching her be scratching at the window? I feel that a peeping tom would be trying to ne as quiet as possible so that they could get away with it longer and thus see more. Scratching at the window seems more like the behavior of some sort of monster, so maybe you could make the shadow look grotesque or something, unless you particularly want the antagonist to be human. If so, then maybe you could change tge scratching part to make it make more sense. :)