Talk:Silent Spring/@comment-26326346-20180813082930

A couple of things that I'd like to state right off the bat: 1. You did your research and/or knowledgeable about birds (the subject of the story) I wish more authors took the time to learn what they write about because it always adds to the story. 2. I felt that the pictures added to the story and made it seem smaller than it really is (which makes it naturally easier for one to read), but I feel like you could have taken advantage of pictures to add to the fear factor of the story. Maybe some nighttime photos could have been mixed in of owls or bears, perhaps even birds.

Those things said, I thought it was a great read and enjoyed the memo feel it had to it. The memo approach sucked me right in and immediately raised the question of "What thing is causing these birds to go silent?". I enjoyed the steady dribble of vague information about the creature, presumably a very large bird (perhaps a pterodactyl???) and still not having any sort of real answer as to what it was at the end.

The mystery element of the story was its greatest strength and where I found the creepy factor to come from. The final line of the document is what did it most for me and actually gave me a small chill, "Following DoD intervention, the phenomenon of avian silence has been rectified." Reading between the lines here, the DoD captured, relocated, or killed the creature and that really raises the question as to what they'd have to use to do that and what means they used to keep everyone silent. Then we've got the name "Project Thunderbird" which either suggests that the thing could use electricity in some capacity (hinted at with the bad storm that knocks the equipment off line) or its vocals being loud and able to incite terror kinda like thunder does (which is something that is outright stated with the recordings causing the vocals of all birds to shut down, probably from a hardwired fear in their brains), so perhaps the name comes from both.

Despite the somewhat vague and mystery nature of the story, I can see if I analyze it deeply enough that it was largely plotted out and you probably have an idea of what the creature actually was, but you didn't tell us or show and that left us - the readers - wanting more, a great move.

This was a great read, good job!