Talk:The Beautiful Pendant/@comment-25052433-20160428122643

This was a cool story, but I think the choice of 2nd person detracted away from the overall feel. Telling the reader what they would or wouldn't do often tends to distant the reader from the actual work, especially if the scenerios that you're describing or the overall scene isn't organic to that reader's life. 3rd person would have likely been a better choice here.

Still, for a short pasta, this one was well written and suspenseful. Well done!