Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28612108-20160603053725/@comment-28607815-20160604060059

Empy here pretty much pointed all all the flaws in the story. But there's just one other thing I'd like to add. Never, I mean never, start off the story with a dead protagonist. The second I read that, all of the tension, the atmosphere, all traces of it vanish. Why read a story if you already know how it will end?

Another thing I'd like to address is the fact that our protagonist, who is already dead, went out of his way to write this story about how he died. How did he do that?

For your next story, try a little harder, put more effort into your work. That isn't to say you didn't put any effort into this story. You did. Just not enough of it. In short, I want to see you improve. Because I love creepypastas and this community.