Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37810803-20181231231243/@comment-36627132-20190102083620

DrBobSmith wrote: Ned,

It sounds to me like a nightmare written up. They almost never work as a pasta because the brain in a dream state makes associations that don't work in the waking state. That's why the whole thing doesn't make sense. I agree.

I think one of the biggest flaws of this story is that it feels truncated. The author should have given us some detail and build-up instead of a quickly rushed story that starts in what should be the end of it.