Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32807959-20181216231739/@comment-9041013-20181218012642

This is long and dry.

Rats as the antagonist? sure, you could work with the concept. Not the way you did, however. Rat's won't eat away at a person randomly in an open space where they could possibly find a less dangerous source of food. I say that because it takes one good kick to actually kill a rat, no joke.

The whole notion of a sea of rats eating a bunch of people comes of cartoonish and silly.

The mutant rat thing made it even more cartoonish because it reminded me of The Penguins From Madagascar series where they have this king rat who's a giant muscular rat (relatively to other rats).

the ending looks like someone was attempting the dumbest suicide ever, suicide by rats who shouldn't care... This needs a whole re-do.

If you want a story about rats, go for someone stuck in a small space with only rats but is afraid of vermin or a person who's stranded somewhere and resorts to talking to the rats or something.