Talk:The Bread Box/@comment-30994599-20170817070419

Fairly simplistic, but even so, I'd have to say it needs work. The picture really doesn't add much, unless it's in a dumpster. The scenario provides too few details to make it unsettling, and the tone is too impersonal to be considered credible. Try creating an experience someone or yourself has with it, or develop the lore a bit.