Talk:A Bad Night/@comment-5632489-20150225022157

(Promised I'd leave a review so here it is :D)

Hahaha that took a dark turn didn't it? Going from bad (losing your job) to worse (having your flesh inevitably eaten). I really like the line "The trees in their stark nakedness reached into the bleak sky like the fingers of the damned, a light wind causing them to creak and groan in their torment." Same with the "A blossom of agony..." I love the use of "blossom" as an adjective, it has the ability to breathe even more life into any sentence from what I've seen.

In addition to your detailed descriptions, I also like the ending's delivery here. At first it made me go "wtf, what do zombie kids have to do with anything?" But I went back and read it again and I realized the subtle hints you gave with the talk of Marx's plant...clever writing there :)

If I could suggest anything I would have personally made the description of Molly killing her mother a bit richer, such as putting a bit more emphasis on the deaths, though not to levels where you turn off your readers of course. All in all, I liked this, looking forward to reading some of your other pastas in the future.