Talk:Broken Mirrors/@comment-26112985-20150704200304/@comment-26193563-20150711183800

Sorry for the wait.

Cutting out the bullying part was nice, but people should show more disgust or pity toward this guy. No one would bully a deformed guy, but they would make fun of them, say nasty stuff about him behind their backs, laugh at him, etc. Basically, I think (key word: think) you show more people feeling a disgusted or repulsive attitude and air around him.

And you should work some more...gore in. Not gore like Cupcakes, used as a shock value, but the sexual kind like The Gym Teacher. Deliberate, sideways fantasies.

Still a great read, lel.