Talk:Temps de Glisser/@comment-24618087-20140328212424

Apart from how weird this story was, as the random suicide didn't make much sense or show any real importance, and how unnecessary the damages towards the hooker were, this was a pretty good story.

The only problems I could find with this were many grammar issues in the dialogues, switching the periods with commas, and some colons and semicolons were needed in certain areas, but nothing too major.

I'd have to give this a 9/10.