Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9584883-20150109222406/@comment-27007772-20150128194046

I realize my response to your post on my talk page may be late, I've been rather busy and my schedule hasn't gifted me any free time. I obviously can't do a paragraph-by-paragraph review of this story, because the review would be the biggest article I've ever created!

The character development is a masterpiece here, with such good flow it is as if their perfect thoughts were written down on the wiki. The idea of anti-heroes is very nice, and the fact it ends on a sad, more touching, and violent note (the last sentence reminded me of an 80's action movie, in a good way) is very likable, too. The story didn't creep me out as much as I would have hoped, but it seems this is completely related to my fears being different.

I'll review more of your stories as time allows with actual, full, large, detailed reviews.

-Score- Plot 3/3 Creepiness 1/3 Characters 3/3 Execution 1/1

7/10 The start of a Creepypasta masterpiece, if continued at this level.