User blog comment:SnakeTongue237/A Confession To Make.../@comment-26447589-20150530170332

After reading over that story, I believe that it's definitely creepy! When reading your other story, "Something Is Wrong", I say that your writing skills have definitely imporved between the two - but other than the skill improvements, your story "After Hours" is great. But! I do suggest small adjustments, such as not having many paragraphs in between - try getting rid of the space between them, and put the two smaller paragraphs together. Another small thing is your choice of punctuation. If you sort of refrained from using commas, so they'll only appear every so often in the appropriate places - well, I'm not trying to be a grammar nazi at all, but it would look a bit cleaner! Other than those small things, your pasta is great in any other way! I'd rate it 9/10 !