Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28466248-20160720234744/@comment-28266772-20160721173121

I'm sorry if what I wrote was disparaging. I tend to critique by omission where if I don't mention something it's good. In your case your imagery is really good and you paint a good picture. A great example is the imagery of the clouds at the beginning which created a vivid picture in my mind. You're clearly a good writer and we all make mechanical mistakes when writing - as for the plot I don't think this needs anything more than a couple more drafts and it'd be a good story. I just find that by focusing on what needs to be improved I can offer you the most helpful advice but that inherent negativity shouldn't be taken as a sign that your story sucks. I sincerely hope this hasn't discouraged you from further efforts because I can say quite confidently you're not a bad writer.