Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26069126-20150202192214/@comment-26007602-20150206143848

I'm almost insulted that you thought you had to explain what a twist is, but that's beside the point.

After you cleared up my questions about the story, I have one piece of advice left to offer you. You need to imply what the "bad man" is in the story. There's no implication that this was a vampire from the previous night and the reader cannot infer that from the story either. Just some small thoughts from Joseph about their time together in the beginning will leave the reader less confused at the end.