Talk:The Russian Sleep Experiment/@comment-26162703-20150302193653

It's a good story, but i would friendly recommend that you change the numbers of patients so to achieve consistency in the story, what i mean is that you start the story with 5 test subjects, one dies inside de chamber, another when they are freed, then from the remaining three, the first one, "the most injured", died in the operation table, then you repeat twice that there still three patients, because after that point you mention that "the first to start screaming" is the second patient and that there are still two operations after that one, and in the next paragraph you actually say " All three subject's restraints were reinforced and they were placed back into the chamber", but if you started with 5 subjects, one dies inside the chamber, one dies leaving it and one dies in the operation table, how could you posible have three remaining subjects to place back in the chamber?. It's just a thought, so it would seem more real.