Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27080023-20151015114153/@comment-27080023-20151116211051

Ok so, I "think" I fixed the punctuation errors... I am sure you guys do not want to read this yet again, but if anyone could skim through to check the punctuation is good to go I would appreciate it.

Shadowswimmer77, thank you for your opinion. I very slightly changed the ending for the purpose of the story in first person, I see what you mean about the reader knowing that the girl escaped unharmed from the beginning so it spoils the twist. I personally do not think it does because to me it is perfectly feasible that the girls could have escaped from Evangeline with no further issues as long as they did not accompany her upstairs, but I totally see where you were coming from and I AM going to write this story out again, in third person in order to improve myself and to make it less clear what happened to the girls afterwards.

For now however, I am happy enough with this to re post it as long as the punctuation passess quality standards :) Anyone care to check for me, a quick skim should do it :)