Talk:Choke.exe/@comment-16427349-20140718225421

That wasn't a millimeter or an atom of scary. It was too predictable and it took you what seemed like 2 hour just to get to the "scary" part of the story. It has too much signs of being discovered made up. Unlike the other stories; they have more detail and took time and the scary parts start from the first word, unlike yours took place half-way through the whole story. I like the plot and back story and all, but you could of used more detail. Instead of having a completely black background on the desktop, it could of been black with blood dripping from the background. And whenever he  clicked on the "Choke.exe" after all of the crap that happened on screen, as he got back up there could of been something like a picture of people whom were hung from past users who clicked on "Choke.exe". It would of made the story a lot better and have more fans and probably had some videos made on it. Sorry if it seems like I'm ranting on, but actually in reality; I'm helping.