Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26588881-20150708014508/@comment-26723520-20150717194624

Reading this it's kind of similar to NoEnd house but only has three rooms. For the main problems of the story why does this scuba diver go into a underwater base when he ran out of gas? Shouldn't he of been more worried about getting back to shore. Finally is how would this monster/being know if someone knows of it and if this person know's that why would they write a note? I think this could be pretty good if you spent more time explaining things.