Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190617214841/@comment-26444017-20190618215330

I disagree. I thought it was pretty straightforward. The phone apparently works, but the person calling it is a home intruder, and the last line references Daisy's 10 hops with the invader's 10 bounding steps, already inside the house.

I'd say your biggest concern is the cliché that this plays off of: I found this spooky thing for free at a yard sale. The story itself is solid, in my opinion, but that detail will turn some people away. There's not much to be done about it, so this is more of a disclaimer than anything.

I'd also be curious to know if the intruder is the salesman or not, but at the same time, I feel like knowing would ruin part of the story.