Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26543178-20150628015542/@comment-26490050-20150628054615

The dog was a good addition. Like he said, it added tension and a twist at the end. Also, you hinted about the killer and he methods. Again,  some of the grammar needs work, but it's understandable. The difference between "had been" and "was" is small, but can change the entire feel of the story. I could explain it, but honestly, someone, like an admin, would be a little better at it. Otherwise, good update.