Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30265517-20180318162713/@comment-9041013-20180325231412

Kolpik wrote: I wanted to reread your story, but the pastebin page is empty. You could just post the story right on this page. I'm new to this site and CPs in general, so I'm not aware of all the clichés, pitfalls, etc. one can stumble into while writing CPs. I can't recall (cuz' I can't reread it), but what was the protagonist's motivations for wanting to meet God? That could be a nice addition to the story if you didn't really go into that.

I don't think I could sit in that room for seven hours while I was tripping, so that affected me. I kept wondering if that guy was brave or stupid. That's good, because you've got me sympathizing with the character and his predicament.

I hate to say this, but the whole "God is dead," line is something I hear too often. It felt more like a punch line than a CP ending. My response was more like "Hahaha?" than "Oh, shit!" Which response would you rather have when you come to the end of a CP? Changing that around or rewording it is my recommendation.

All that being said, I liked your story and I think it has a lot of potential. Keep writing and don't let anyone turn you from the page. I think "God is dead" is to be blamed on Nietzsche, he kind of coined the phrase. Here's the thing it is overused, but I would try to defend it, as I've used it as a point in a story (not the punch or the conclusion). I think the way its presented and its plotline reason is what makes it work, in certain cases.

I am making myself seem bigger than I am, yes. ​​​​​​

Why would one want to meet God? It's the BIG Boss of the universe, so we all have that desire to meet this HUGE figure. but overall, yeah I agree with you.