Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26070194-20150203021526/@comment-17758905-20150203025615

Well for one, the Japanese names in a non-Japanese game will probably throw people off, especially when mixed in with things like "Thomas Masters", which sounds American.

Anyway, what do you want when you say tragic? I mean, tragic could simply be that their parents died. In the case of Thomas here, it looks like he would probably be abused or something considering he fears his father. Unless you have no strict ideas on why he fears his father in which case we could have something like:

"After his mother died, Thomas was stuck underneath the constant tyranny of his father, especially since his brother was always the favorite. Eventually, one day he snapped. Thomas cut up his baby brother and cooked him into a meatloaf filled with cyanide. Thomas then gave the meatloaf to his dad which killed him. However, Thomas suffered from insanity afterwards and found himself being haunted by his father's ghost."

There you've got insanity and gore. And for all I know, you want it over the top.

So basically, it'd help if you told us what you wanted in general, because on one end you've got both parents dying to a teenager who murdered their family in decidedly harsh ways.

Also, how is this all related with each other? I mean, do they all live in the same town for example and suddenly everyone else disappears besides them because they're important for some mission for whatever? Is this game just split amongst these five people with radically different stories? Where does horror even play into this?