Talk:The Nice Guy/@comment-24190515-20140821145255

The first five paragraphs seemed overly descriptive and did not match the rest of the story, which fell into a very natural style which I liked much better. Throughtout the story, some of the dialogue did not seem like actual language a character would use - rather more like the narrator.

Overall, though, I really enjoyed it. 9/10 and my vote for POTM