Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-26952912-20150925201752/@comment-27024986-20150929193751

The theme is interesting, I have to say that. Only if you could make it more cool the structure of the story, put more a bit of depth into it and not only he did that, I did that and he died. Also you have quite various ortography and grammar mistakes here and there, so you already understand you should look it out a bit (I hope). I only hope its going to be better in the end.

DONT LISTEN TO THIS IDIOT! YOUR STORY I

Please ignore what just happened. The one who wanted to insult your story was OCT (I call him Snappy). He always is telling lies and likes to trouble people so for now dont believe anything he is saying and also I believe that you can do a better work if you want to. Oh, to make things clear, Im the owner of Snappy.

Good Luck!!! :)