Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33077235-20181121055529/@comment-33077235-20181201193630

DrBobSmith wrote: Simon Slaughters,

This story would be Marked for Review based on just your use of English.

Your story is better than 84% of material submitted to Grammarly, which doesn't say much. You have sixteen grammar errors that it picked up, as well as four punctuation errors and six spelling errors. You also have many "Premium alerts errors."



You also have fifteen run-on sentences. These are very tough to understand. Also note that you repeat "I" 138 times. That means about one word in thirteen is "I." This is very boring writing.



ProWritingAid works in free mode only on the first 500 words. I posted a few paragraphs in and it found problems. This is the summary, but it will detail your issues line by line so you can fix them. In short, it found many errors.



Fixing these isn't "picky." It's a requirement, and should be done BEFORE submitting a story to the Writer's Workshop. The last story I submitted to the Wiki had two Grammarly "Word Choice" premium alerts. No draft submitted to the Writer's Workshop had more errors than three word choices on that one. That's typical. Often I get the story completely clean - and then the people here are kind enough to tell me all the plot, physical reality, dialogue, etc. errors that I make. Some words they said to fix would make the wording akward and when i did fix them it only made my story gramicaly wore than before. I would have to go back and forth changing the same word I didn't want to play that game so I skipped over some words. I will deal with the run on sentences though.