Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180623205835/@comment-26444017-20180623212803

If it was touched up a bit, I could see it getting approved. My problem was that I just didn't find it particularly frightening.

The spelling and grammar definitely need to be corrected before posting. As far as the rest goes, I'm not sure where you can take this to make it more ominous. The entire 'scare' factor comes from the idea that group exists, but there's so much else in there that is more comical than scary that it detracts from the purpose.

Maybe after an edit to correct things, it'll be easier to see what to do next.