Talk:A Simple Saturday Morning/@comment-5632489-20150129185020

For writing, this pasta gets, like, a 4.0/10. Some of it was improbable, a lot of the writing was obviously rushed/sloppy, the maggots thing was stupid, and there's quite a few errors to be found. But one of the most crucial things I judge a story by is if it made me feel something, and this story certainly accomplished that. This is a really effective scenario: the fear of seeing your family fall apart, seeing your entire life change completely at a moment you would never, ever expect, and being absolutely powerless to do anything to save the people you loved so dearly, only to be hit even harder when you pile all the guilt onto yourself for not saving them. This situation really taps into very real fears that people of all ages suffer from. So yeah, the writing is really blah and subpar, but for grabbing at my heart and squeezing it you get an 8.0/10. Not bad at all.