Talk:Corpus/@comment-4715955-20170828220054/@comment-30307610-20170901021932

Thanks man, I appreciate it. I'll go through with the edits that you mentioned. I will admit I missed the Callosotomy misspellings, but Colostomy is also not spelled that way.

The chemicals are vague, but I figured that was not important to get into, my mistake, I probably should have. Will fix that with my next update.

Yep, definitly meant one way. Thanks.

I was talking about how people chew on their cheeks or lips. I dont think I phrased it very well. I will work on the story some more but I was trying to suggest that these were the persons personal notes, not anything that would have been written up, just his jots as he was observing before the compiling and submission. True I should do it better.

There wasnt really any supernatural occurances though. The only really "supernatural" thing that I put in there was that the electrical activity in their brain was higher causing actual electrical shock. The ending monologue is my least favorite part of the story, but I had written it about 20 times and this was the best version of it. Its meant to imply that the subconsious had taken over the brain after being reconnected. I wasn't attempting to be profound. It does need a bit more work and from what you are saying it appears that maybe the crux of the story didn't get across so I will work on it some more.

Again, thank you for your review. I hope you revisit the story after I have made some edits to let me know what you think.