Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26809749-20161012190945/@comment-30179461-20161012225258

I would say that you should improve your story's puntuation and grammar. The plot is solid enough, I suppose. The ending did feel slightly rushed. Commas seem to be an issue here. I would point them out, but there are just too many places where commas should be placed, and they are not present. Other than that, the story could use some work, and if you changed some things up, maybe rewrote certain plot elements, I believe that this story has potential.

~Knight Stone-Fist