Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33696343-20181115144801/@comment-9041013-20181116212721

Uhh so this is basically a needlessly supernatural story that has no plot flow at all? Okay, so here's a little tip; instead of going the route of random supernatural stuff just happening with the plot jumping all over the place, how about you write a story about a guy who does not pack enough water for a trip in Death Valley? His water runs out, he starts hellucinating, maybe bites into a Cactus and goes bonkers seeing things that he thinks are there but we know aren't.

Just because it has "Death" doesn't mean there have to be demons running about.