Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32641928-20170721111642/@comment-32641928-20170724033629

Resdraon wrote: To make this clear the way it is written was done on purpose. It meant to look like it was written by a person who doesn't say things like "aww Thanks, dad you didn't have too." but "I appreciate the gift but I assure you, you weren't required to buy me anything." She analyzes everything and will remember things like a number of pages in a book over what her father actually said to her.

This is something that you shouldn't have to say. If you actually pulled it off, then there is no reason for you to explain one's character. I know. Originally someone told me that should rewrite to story so it would be less wordy and I was just making sure to write why it was originally so wordy because the person was a very wordy person. That is mostly for the original draft tho because I changed the character and story when I realized I couldn't pull it off.