Talk:Booty Call/@comment-28360473-20160528072948

Nice work for a first work!

Some clichés here and there. The fact that she kills 'em, for instance, but that's excused in my opinion by how surprisingly you executed the plot twist. Which leads to the plot twist, which is kinda cliché in that it was delivered in the form of a news story and I feel it could've been delivered some other way possibly even more effectively. Then there's the "The source hypothesized that this was likely the work of a lithe male, although apparently a female killer has not been entirely ruled out" — this, by the way, obviously seems forced — and "Anecdotal evidence suggests that the three shared some kind of romantic link" which are sentences which are conflicting. Back to the rest of the story, I have just one thing to nitpick. I don't get why the narrator doesn't look back when hearing the voices. It may just be her thoughts as a result of unstated emotions and events, which is actually quite a cool, clever thing in my opinion, but the fact she doesn't look back even while running bothers me and feels a tiny bit cliché as well, at least in my opinion.

Overall, a wee good bit cliché and it gets pretty predictable, but outstandingly and cleverly done, especially considering this is your first work. I'd say a 7.3/10. Nice.