Talk:The Ritual of Extension/@comment-5733573-20180709172043

This has some problems. For one thing, not all of the items that are needed are listed. You don't mention dice anywhere in your list, for instance. Also, what's a "good mindset?" That's never explained and just seems like an attempt to be clever that never really lands. There are also some clear typos like in the following sentence:

"To rid of the danger, take the device and burn it with the lighter."

Also, the following is reduntant:

"If you move, the shreds and the device will explode, fatally injuring if not killing you."

To be "fatally injured" is to be "killed." That's what "fatal" means.

It also just feels a little random and disconnected, like you didn't really put a lot of thought into what each step would mean or what any of the items would symbolize. It just didn't really grip me and wasn't scary.