Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33803324-20190201125749/@comment-36627132-20190201130417

This board is to post finished stories for feedback before posting, so I don't really think this is the right place for this.

In addition, I advise against posting just opening lines. It's always better to finish a story, then post it to writer's workshop so we can give you accurate feedback and won't have to keep checking back to see if you posted more.