Talk:The Lumbermill Letter/@comment-35359331-20181023233816

Major error that stuck in my mind: early in the story, it's mentioned that Max "had a sword at his waste."

Unless you mean that he had a shit-covered sword, you should probably change "waste" to "waist."

Also, overall, I found it rather strange that you chose to introduce all of the characters by name right away, rather than give us a little background on the entire situation. You could take this whole idea, which, although cheesy, is rather fun, and write it as if it were a Quentin Tarantino film, in which all  of the scenes of the story are shown, but not necessarily in order.

Other than those things, I'd say this is a rather enjoyable read, so long as you can sort through all of the errors easily. Keep working on it; you have a rather solid idea going here, and if you flesh it out, you should be good to go. If you need help, feel free to ask me, as I'd be more than happy to work with you on this. Like I said, keep going.