Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-11335105-20140525223718/@comment-4832646-20140525232835

If this is serious, then you have a lot of work to do.

For one, there's the fact that it's a chain letter. That's severely annoying. For another, there's absolutely no build-up, description, or literary merit at all whatsoever. For another thing, it goes against the ery ethics of realism in human behavior. Usually, when someone commits suicide, even the bullies have a heart enough to care.

There's grammatical errors, and this is something that, to be honest, is downright terrible.