Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20180619163716/@comment-35711173-20180619181108

KillaHawke1 wrote: Thanks everyone. I thought I had fixed the quote boxes when I uploaded. Regardless, I will get it fixed. I do agree with a bit too much spanish, especially in the "I curse you" parts. I like the other phrases in the beginning and end, but you are right, that middle is too much.

Killahawke1,

Knowing when there is much use of a foreign language is tough, especially when it isn't foreign to you. You have to see it as if it were Latvian or Swahili or some other language that you don't understand at all. Would it distract you if that much of the story was in Tongan?

Jdesche has nailed me the same way on too much use of tech terms in my last story. They got in the way of conveying the emotions.

DrBobSmith (talk) 18:11, June 19, 2018 (UTC)