Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5239282-20140823211335/@comment-5239282-20140825032635

Umbrello wrote: I think balance is the key. Comedy is in the timing, and if there's too much then there ends up being no timing at all. I did find some stuff funny, like when he thought his sister was a juggalo. Maybe it's just overload? Funny how I was considering cutting that out. ;p

Perhaps it relies too much on shock value. And I notice the introduction is a bit slim. How would more diverse humor, dispersed evenly through the entire story, affect it?

I'm going to experiment with it. Yeah.