Talk:Personal Demons/@comment-25052433-20150724210552

Alright, just finished Personal Demons. Let's face our own worst fears and unleash this review.

Creativity: The over all concept here is nothing new, but you did a nice job of adding some nice twists along the way. This was sort of imaginary friend story done pretty well. The ending was a bit cliche though, with the suicide and all, so I think you could have done a bit better with a more original ending.

Quality of Story: This seemed to drag in a lot of places. I felt that a good deal of what was said here could have been condensed to make the story flow a bit better. Your descriptive work was really good though and did a nice job of pulling me into the story.

Quality of Characters: The development was very light in this one. I feel as though we didn't really get to know the main character. He was presented as more of a means to tell the story than an actual active player in it all. You had a lot of chances here to really give the demons their own personalities and such, and I feel that you sort of missed the mark on that. With the length of this story, I feel it would have been a lot better if some of the space was dedicated to developing the story rather than just the main character rambling on and on.

Creepiness: You did score very well in this department. The story had a very creepy vibe, especially when you factor in the fact that these demons were all living in the character's head. The closing scene, when he looked around and saw all of the demons standing around him was very creepy, especially the part where they were looking in the second story window. Excellent job on that.

Over all, I'll give this one 60 points. Combine that with Grim's 72, and you get a respectable 132.

Final Score 132 points.