Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24918243-20140607065334/@comment-24821182-20140609070251

This is much better, and the ending was brilliant. The addition of Robyn as the one who spreads the urban legend of Nana Razor was very well done, and there's a sense of mystery and legitimate horror to the whole thing.

There are some punctuation and capitalization issues, particularly during dialogue, and I already commented on that in my first review: "When you follow a piece of dialogue up with he/she/it said/thought/yelled, you don't end the piece of dialogue with a period, but rather with a comma. If the piece of dialogue comes after you telling us who said it, then it's justified to end with a period."

In other words, it's not ''"I'm scarred, Nana." Ally cried... but "I'm scared, Nana," Ally cried...'' (corrected misspelling.)

In addition to this, if a sentence continues after a piece of dialogue, you don't capitalize the words after the quotation marks unless the word is a name or for some other reason must always be capitalized.

It's not "Take this," She pulled... but "Take this," she pulled...

Once you've proofread, I definitely think this could be posted as an article.