Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180621195836/@comment-26444017-20180630105418

Sorry, I've been typing my ass off for like 4 straight hours at this point, and I really haven't gotten to look it over in full again. I did read through the first few paragraphs and noticed the changes right away. I do think it flows much better now, and there is a bit of explanation as to who the Tartars were and how they relate to the dream. Overall, as far as that is concerned, I'd say it was much improved.

As for the rest, I'll try to read through the entire thing tomorrow or Sunday, whichever I have time for first. I skimmed through it, and didn't notice the alterations, but since you mentioned that they were more technical in nature, I probably will when reading more carefully. I'm looking forward to it.