Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29015383-20160714143121/@comment-25226524-20160716163630

I'm not really crazy about this one, but the writing is fine. I'm simply not sure if a rather vague first person account of Stockholm syndrome is all that creepy. I feel like it needs to be more extreme to have any impact (especially the kind we want on this site).

I'm probably not the best person to get advice from in this instance, because I have no boundaries, but I could see a woman telling her story and towards the end we find out she has no arms or legs (at the hands of her "lover") and is in a remote cabin somewhere waiting for his return. That adds in a much more disturbing picture as well as the knowledge that she will likely be left to starve to death. See the difference? It goes from a rather generic, albeit bothersome story, to a full on horror story. I'm not saying use this idea, but just consider some other options.

Get freaky with it. If you've got the stomach for it, feel free to read my two monologues on my user page. Ned the Nihilist and Verner the Vigilante. Don't read them if you're easily offended or squeamish. Not for any other reason except to just get your mind rolling with some different styles and visuals. Don't be afraid to freak people out. Good luck.