Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190326080033/@comment-9041013-20190402202648

DrBobSmith wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote:

Its a governemt controlling dysponian story that is maintained through "super" soldiers of sorts

The batman means hes a bit of a lary stu from the emotional aspect.

The Larry Stu part I get, and I will work on that. How is he a "super soldier?" I see him as an overweight 40 ish guy with a pistol who is required by his society's ethics of becoming a mass murderer to do the moral thing of saving his own children. Yeah I got it, but ive told you ~ he should suffer from that internally to a degree, makes him more relatable