Talk:Allison's Story/@comment-25471033-20180322190744

This is a perfect example of a creepypasta. Subtle things drags the suspense, adding on to it, and then the ending happens, but we don't know exactly what the ending even is. This was pretty well done, the only complaint I have is the end, where you cut it off so fast by her laying in the icy snow and dirt dying. I feel like dying is letting your character go a little too easy, maybe end it like: whatever pulled on her leg to make her fall is now pulling her slowly, almost unnoticeably, since she was falling asleep, due to hitting her head or something. 8.5/10