Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26028829-20150121090823/@comment-26028829-20150124084030

I'm not the creator of the story, my friend furiousvallhalla wrote it, i just posted it to help me guys to tell him to fix some stuff..some *cough* But thanks for the notes (Yes i tried to fix some stuff on the Story it needed more time and more Rich Grammar with more detail. If you have other tips tell me, so he can Evolve his grammar and Story Telling.