Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37261931-20181126193445/@comment-9041013-20181127170806

So your character is basically the manly man hero who does not have any actual fear or emotion for that matter? It's highly unrelatable and rather flat. You need to make me feel for this guy, I can't care about someone's suffering if they don't really suffer. Make the characters come of as real.

Imagine yourself in the captain's boots - how would you feel? that's what you write.

You also have to make the monster scarier, something about this just screams a giant humanoid human eating puffer fish and that's not really scary the way you've portrayed it. Make me feel like Im face to face with the creature.