Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24766402-20140427201208/@comment-24841732-20140427202345

When they meet face to face, you need to use quotation marks. Also, the NSFW tag isnt really needed. There is some refences to sex, but nothing to gratutious to warrent it. Other than that, work on the ending a bit. It jumps right to the closing paragraph it is somewhat jarring.