Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25288624-20140810235537/@comment-25291276-20140813141037

Eeeeh I hope I don't sound like I'm hating when I say this, but I don't like the story. It could be made better by taking away the numerous clichés.

You want to write a mad man killing for the heck of it? Okay, but do it so when people read your text, they genuinly feel scared when reading the descriptions of the actions of your character.

The whole things feels rushed and could be better. Although it would need to be rewritten almost completely.