Talk:The Nightmare Within/@comment-247250-20141209110646

The last sentence is unnecessary. That said, the rest of the story isn't too bad. I wish there were some clear moment that we could go back to and realize "Aha, so that's when the change-over happened" or at least some gradual change in her to indicate that a transformation is taking place. Instead the switch is really sudden, and honestly pretty predictable after the arm thing. I think it would be better if you mentioned that she got scraped too in the dream, so that we could plausibly think that the demon's wound wasn't the reason for hers in the real world (which comes off pretty obviously the way it's currently written)

Overall, the story is a solid 7.5-8/10. Nicely done.