Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-6822927-20190104215501/@comment-6822927-20190106205814

NedWolfkin wrote: KingSparta300 wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: KingSparta300 wrote: Yeah, I agree. Some parts need to be reworked.

Out of curiosity, did you find any parts creepy? I did enjoy writing about the two presences, both of which are supposed to be the Fey Folk. I should make it more clear.

As for the parts where he plays pretend, the main character is remembering his childhood before it progresses to him having grown up, no longer playing pretend. This is one theme the story should explore more thoroughly, growing up and how things you enjoyed as a child change along with you. I didn't find anything creepy really, because again, I had to re-adjust myself every other sentence. I see. So, horror is dampened when the writing is of poor quality. Definitely. It's hard to take a story seriously when the writing makes it look like a trollpasta. Damn. I know I can write better than this too, like with the Headless Fairy. That was easily the best thing I ever wrote.

Something went wrong here, and I have only myself to blame. I tried to make the story too many things at once when it should have just been one thing only - a boy and his dog going for a walk through one of his old childhood haunts but finds things aren't as he remembered.