Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35515534-20190605053523/@comment-35515534-20190606200655

BloodySpghetti wrote: Well, you know, Less is more... but this is not enough.

You need to give us some more detail, or establish an atmosphere... "there's something that's chasing the guy, he is scared, he ends up killing it but then the corpse is gone..."

So... what should I care about in this whole thing? I don't see it.

What should I be afraid of? A general random creature... not exactly scary.

Create a connection between what happens in the story, and what the audience is meant to feel.

Also, don't forget the details you've introduced. Working on a second draft!