Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29076144-20160827213838/@comment-25226524-20160827221434

First off, I had to repost this to get rid of the tiny font and format issues, but that removed all the italics. It's up to you if you add them back in, but it's not necessary to italicize inner thoughts in a first-person narrative (some people may disagree with this, but it's merely personal preference). At a glance you need to go back over this and look for lowercase "I"s and double-check all of your "it's" and "its" because I see issues there already. Another thing you need to fix is how you punctuate your slang. Here's an example:

“Go explore the land or ‘somethin, ‘whateva ‘ye boys do these days.”

The apostrophe should be on the end of the word where the letters have been removed. Here is what that sentence should look like:

“Go explore the land or somethin', whateva ye (or ya) boys do these days.”

Notice I removed the apostrophe from "whateva" and "ye" because they aren't really omitting any letters. They are slang creations, like "gonna" replacing "going to". I'll list some examples below to help you get the idea.

Helluva - Hell of a

goin' - going

'ello - Hello (British)

'98 - 1998 (or the 98th year of whatever century the context dictates)

runnin' - running

'im - him (He's gonna get 'im)

'em - them (He's gonna get 'em)

gettin' - getting

Hopefully those examples are enough to give you the right idea of how writing slang/accents works.