Talk:Heavenly Star/@comment-4665292-20170614105952

Awesome! The "Fucking MONKS! CHANTING!" made me laugh, which is always a welcome addition in stories that are otherwise not funny. There were a few minor issues like "millennium" instead of "millennia" or "a millennium", but that didn't distract from the masterfully written hallucinations. I'm not sure if I'd really call it creepy, considering the whole thing was the protagonist's hallucination, but it did have some interesting stuff. The twist at the end wasn't as effective as it could have been, but that gave everything that happened an increased creepy atmosphere even if it was just a placebo effect and/or a psychotic break. I'll give it 8/10.