Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20190622004216/@comment-26475800-20190623020344

I like this a lot. It's a good story. The only real issues that I saw was that the flow is a little jaunty in a few places. At least the flow doesn't sound right, so I'm going to guess that there are some places where the syllables aren't right. Not that I'm the best with poetry, but that was the only thing I've noticed.