Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28060931-20160918203623/@comment-27838637-20160920223558

I'll just drop in and say that you have improved quite a bit, and I can't really add any more advice to this story, but I may have some more advice for your writing in general.

I've seen you abandon alot of your ideas. There is heaps of potential in your writing, but you are young, and you just need to work hard to get everything perfect, including pacing, dialogue, plot tone etc. The best way you can do this is by focusing on one story. I know why you want to move on to other stories, and how frustrating it is to continually work on the same story over and over again, but that is a part o writing.

Take the story you posted to here some time ago as a great example. The one where the kid finds the crazy underground sewer/dungeon with monsters in it. That is a simple plot, and the original story you posted to the Writers Workshop had a lot of room for improvement. You have improved so much since then by writing new stories, but you'd have improved even more if you stuck with that story back then and made it work. Trust me, editing a story to make it work is alot easier than giving up and writing a completely new story. I know you can get a story to the wiki, but you have to keep yourself focused on a single story, and stay motivated to complete it.

This might seem harsh, but you can't really adress the issues in this story by writing a new one. That is why sticking to a story and trying your hardest to bring it up to QS is a better idea, and one that is well worth your time.

In my personal opinion, you should shift your focus to the 2016 Collaboration. I think writing a very short story (or a number of them) into a collaboration project would be an awesome start for you. It would also force you to read the work of others, learn new skills, and feel that awesome feeling when you finally complete something and post it to the Wiki.

If you are interested just ask Jay ten, he's essentially running the show.

Anyway, that's just some advice from me to you. Hopefully you find it useful!