Talk:Earth's Revolt/@comment-26193563-20150615232846

Time to critique this up.

Apparently, large pieces of Earth's crust are being blasted into space, with humanity NOT surviving.

Since this is a rather short pasta, the review will sort of short, too.

First, my views on humanity. We (I) indeed have destructed and polluted Earth with our chemicals, waste, war, and strife. But do we really deserve to die? The narrator remarks that the religous people are pathetic and weak; couldn't he be more empathetic toward them, let them have false hope? His scorn makes me irritated.

How do pieces of Earth's crust just blast away? The Earth has gravity. What is the backup reason for the apocalyptic chaos,? Discharge of immense amounts of magma? Biosphere penetration with malignant chemicals? Shouldn't gravity hold the pieces back? For billions of years the crust hasn't risen away from the mantle, why now? Basically, what happened to cause the crust parts breaking off and floating into space?

And at the end, the narrator embraces death. He isn't scared of it. Now that's a bit weird, shouldn't he be sort of scared or something? At least some apprehension on the other side?

I feel slightly outraged that everything on Earth will die. Okay, humans caused all these massive demolition and stuff, but what about the animals, trees, fungi, etc? They were always here. They don't deserve to die. This factor is quite though-provoking and makes reader think a bit.

I actually liked this story. The-end-of-the-world thing was used brilliantly in this pasta, but by some of the points addressed above I'll have to take away a few points. The scientific reason was notably lacking, and a really major plot hole.

7.5/10