Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-14193190-20140406105230/@comment-10950063-20140406145308

All right, well, two paragraphs in and this doesn't seem like a creepypasta. It reads more like a middle school essay on superstitions. It's just the way things are phrased.

Repetition by the third paragraph. That's a red flag.

This story is very poorly told. Those first three paragraphs are completely unnecessary. The few pieces of pertinent information should be integrated into the story. Everything is rushed, it reads like a summary, instead of a story. That prevents you from creating effective imagery and creating any kind of tension.

A lot of your sentences start with "I," which makes it very monotonous to read.

Comma usage issues.

Some issues description. Saying it " looked as though my hands were broken" is not a description. There's different ways a hand can appear broken. So, describe it. Describe the reflection. Describe the feelings.

Weak ending. Character is fine and we get no sense of how difficult it is to life in a world where you have to avoid reflections. There's mirrors everywhere.

So, that's why your story was deleted.

Let's make this clear:just because there are low quality stories on the site, doesn't mean we want more. There's over 10,000 stories here. If you find something bad, I'm sorry, but there's a good chance we just haven't found it yet. It's easier to monitor new stories because they're right on top.

Deletions rarely have anything to do with creepiness. We understand that there's a lot of differing views on that, so we're pretty lenient. Deletions have to do with quality.

Lastly, take responsibility for your own story. Save your own work. Here's a copy of it: http://pastebin.com/M5yarf8u