Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180815224155/@comment-35911608-20180816094808

TheWizardOfTheWoods wrote: I very much enjoyed this one. It's an excellent ritual pasta, in my opinion. The backhanded punishment for failure was an extra nicety about it that I was very happy with. There were a few spelling/grammar errors sprinkled in, so I figured I should point them out. They're all pretty minor. Take all of these as suggestions, more than anything else. Again, a great read.

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When you are ready to play, choose any room that can be sealed, the'''[sealed. The]''' term “sealed” here simply meaning that all doorways and windows can be closed.

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You may begin the game at 8pm[8 PM].

flip the hourglass so the sand begins to fall into an empty half[perhaps 'the empty half'].

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so least to say he’s not in the best of moods[perhaps 'he's not in the best of moods, to say the least'].

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which will take you to 4am[4 AM].

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you’ll[you] may have just gone through all of that suffering

Wow, that means a lot, thank you! I know rituals are usually lazy or generic, but I’m glad that I was able to write one you enjoyed :) and yeah, I’ll fix those up today and make a second draft. There’s also some more descriptive sleep deprivation effects I want to include.