Talk:The Last Day of October--Short Hoggers/@comment-4849011-20160413193215/@comment-4893169-20160414020458

Thank you for the edit help Raidra. Yes, there was supposed to something  between “'It would be impossible to describe every door and room he passed through in such a short time, but he had little to fear in the beginning,'” and “'Because there was life within those rooms,' he replied"? I put a why question from Kes so it's fixed now.

I'm going to try to develop more of a stable plot line in my next story rather than spend so much time on description and ancient lore since MrDupin found this particular story very confusing and disorienting to read and follow. I'm glad you had little trouble following that rather convoluted plot here. I'm kind of disappointed with how the actual story got overshadowed by the detail. I think this is a result from me as an illustrator more used to portraying visual detail in painting rather than putting together a working plot line. I think I did better in my shorter stories where I didn't cram so much detail into the stories.