Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20160210235212/@comment-26326346-20160211153932

Thank you for the review. Something feels a bit off to me at the hazmat suit part, so I think I'm going to take the story completely back to the drawing board from that point onward. I am confused about what you mean exactly by the 'Clanking Plates' description being unnecessary, do you mean "(an aptly named buffet chain if there ever was one. The joke was that people would be clanking their plates against the table in a hurry to get more)." If so, that just goes to show that I'm from a town and hardly ever travel to a city and thought that I was making a funny and clever joke, oops XD

The using it as a weapon was simply an offhand comment by one of the hazmat guys, so I wouldn't put too much weight behind that. Though it does undermine the thought that the event might have come about as it being placed to be used as a terrorist weapon.

Ah, my bad there. I just assumed that a laser strong enough to cut something would give off heat. Right, the fungi was an unidentified parasitic type strain.

I don't know how much longer I'll be able to make it as I ended it when I felt that I had nothing left to tell, but I'll be completely reworking/removing the hazmat scene for sure.

Thanks again, hopefully the rework is a lot better!