Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4849011-20180321014712/@comment-4849011-20181009153445

Hey, better late than devoid of Dr. Frank! Whatever I decide to do with it, I appreciate the feedback. :-D

Thank you, I'm glad you thought so! "I like how no real damage is being done to the inmates except for the mental aspect." Exactly. The procedure is harmless and they're actually being treated well, but they're losing control day by day. I'm glad the second-person perspective wasn't an issue.

I can see that. That's an interesting point about how the protagonist feels. Maybe deep down inside they do feel some relief while still wanting to regain control. Maybe some victims of this secretly want to stay because they feel secure despite being prisoners controlled and used by a sociopath. You suddenly made this very philosophical.

Speaking of the scientist, now that you've read this, I can reveal that Professor Cerdis is the guy. What guy? The guy responsible for what happened to Daniel/Devotee from my Houseguest series. He didn't order Daniel's parents to be killed (that was solely the mercenaries doing an incompetent job), but he was the one that made Daniel his guinea pig. That's another reason I wanted you to review this.