Talk:The Recording from a Friend/@comment-25052433-20150520054806

I edited out your brackets because honestly the story didn't really need them to flow. Plus, adding in authors notes in the middle of the plot is a bit strange and disrupts the flow, at least in my humble opinion. If you really want them in there, feel free to put them back, but in all honesty, I think your story works better without them.

As far as the message at the end, it is not necessary to invite people to leave comments, as that is a norm around here if people feel they want to comment on your story. The constructive comment also came across as a bit passive aggressive and would likely grab negative attention and over shadow your work.

All in all I thought this was a good story. There was certainly an element of mystery here, which always works well in a horror setting. You left enough out of the story to keep the reader guessing, and that is always a good product to install into any story.

Thanks for posting. If you should find you need any assistance down the line with writing, feel free to reach out.