Talk:Warm Sweater/@comment-24696015-20170309083420

Look, I don't want to come off as inflammatory or accuse anyone of anything, but... this story is REALLY sexist and... I'm sorry, but dumb. I'm not accusing *you* of being sexist or dumb, but I'm guessing you didn't really think this one through very well.

I know this isn't the first time a story has assumed a woman to be completely and utterly helpless against any aggressive male, but this is definitely the first one I've read where the male in question is frostbitten, crippled and armed with nothing but a rose.

I also can't help but notice the woman doesn't get a single word of dialogue, or perform a single action that isn't screaming in helpless terror - Against a one-armed, frostbitten, mostly-dead man armed with nothing but a rose. Which he also beats her with before actually putting the thorns to use.

I've had my neck cut before, mate. You need a little more than that to get a lethal wound, and thorns aren't even edged. I'd be a *little* more forgiving if the 'weapon' in question was a cactus, but then you'd be dealing with a man who was about to die from dehydration.

I mean... I don't want to make you feel bad, man, but I don't think this can be saved. The premise depends on a protagonist who is literally dying, and yet is able to overpower the object of his 'affection'. Even if you changed the genders so they were both men, so as to lose the 'women are helpless' subtext, you'd still be left with the logical flaws.