Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32144326-20170529153039/@comment-24101790-20170529154101

It was actually deleted because it failed to meet the bare minimum of our quality standards. Even if we to ignore the fact that you forget to capitalize sentences and dialogue properly ("the year was 1998 when I moved in into a flat with my girlfriend, because I just got gradarated from college and made a living to buy a flat.", "I thought "why the heck is it wet?"", etc.), a failure to properly use punctuation where it's needed ("James(comma missing) there(apostrophe missing)s no sheets on the fucking bed!"), run-on sentences ("And lunged at me, i had a baseball bat on me and whacked him twice on the head, and woke up my girlfriend and told her to phone the cops and she got her phone and called the cops the cops came at 4:45 am and busted the door open and told us that the man was a crazy man who was known to the cops as a mass murder and was involved in a bar fight he started."), and numerous typos ("I just got gradarated from college"), redundancies ("called the cops the cops came at 4:45 am and busted the door open and told us that the man was a crazy man who was known to the cops as a mass murder and was involved in a bar fight he started."), there are a lot of story issues as well.

The story is incredibly rushed (take this line for example: "I heard a slam so I got up, and searched the house when I walked on the main corridors floorboard, I felt like someone was underneath the floor boards I opened the floorboards, and regretted I opened it, a seven foot man sat up" which lacks any real tension and makes it seem like you wrote this all in one sitting) and for being a college graduate, the protagonist makes a massive amount of basic English errors. Couple that with the nonsensicalness of the last line: "i don't know what the fuck happend but I don't wanna talk about it" (Why exactly are they writing the story then if they have no intention of talking about it?) and you have a story that fails to meet the basic quality standards of the site. I'm having difficulty finding a sentence that doesn't have a mechanical or plot issue here which really doesn't make for an involving or interesting story. I suggest posting your next story here as there are a lot of issues present in your writing that need correction.