Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20190221225024/@comment-9041013-20190222164123

Well that was predictable... so... no good... I'm just kidding, I could predict the whole pattern because I wrote something similar in the past. It's not bad, it's fine.

You might want to explain how on earth this family is still into the Celtic traditions, with no christianity influencing them if even the Highlanders are somewhat of a "good christian" community for the last thousand years or so. You might want to further point to Emma's reluctance in fully believing the stories. Might make the stories be "just stories" told by her great grandmother that in the end come out as truth long forgotten.

Also, I think you should make Emma and her parents, or just her parents the immigrants, it'd make her stand out at school more with some semblence of a Scottish accent and actual modern Scottish traditions that Jeremy wouldn't have liked.