Talk:The Blackened Land/@comment-5733573-20180528152155

This is a cool idea, but it's not horrifying enough. The ending is too tame and doesn't really warrant the build-up and investment of the rest of the story. There is also a lot of repetition. We don't need the constant reminders that the footage cuts out after "ten seconds." In fact,  not specifying the time would make this more believable. Similarly, once you say the land has been blackened, you don't need to keep saying it. Something else I wish you had addressed is exactly how a land mass that was just underwater has any life on it at all. No one seems to think that's odd in your story, when in fact it's even less likely than a land mass appearing out of nowhere.

As I said, it's a cool idea, and pretty well-written. The plot and realism just need some work. I'm excited to see how this develops.