Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25319269-20150719094034/@comment-26723520-20150720201859

First off you made a giant wall of text so you need to paragraph this because it was a pain to read. Next thing you should do is fix the title to "22b With a Dent" and to check through the story for any grammar issues (have someone proof read/use a website to fix typo's and such).