Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26251513-20150416231159/@comment-25226524-20150417221447

One big reason no one has reviewed this is because it's awkwardly written and almost impossible to tell what's going on. It seems like you may have a good imagination, but you need to do more reading to get a better idea of what proper writing looks like. I can't really say much else, but definitely keep practicing - you'll get better. Check out How to Write a Creepypasta and look through the Writing Advice Blogs. I would also recommend studying the Style Guide before your next attempt. Good luck!