Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27558833-20160108143319/@comment-26007602-20160108191144

Alright, I'm going to warn you now before you continue this story, that it doesn't look like it'll ever work. You're trying to introduce your own OC creepypasta monster instead of actually telling a story. That almost always fails. You never want to tell a story with only the monster in mind, and a story built around it.

There's no story here, and what little you do have isn't interesting or well executed. You simply describe the deaths of people, which aren't effective since we don't care about the victims, nor is there any build up to their deaths. The whole "hand drawn murder photos" is absolutely pointless, as it makes zero sense why someone would draw the murder scene instead of taking a picture.

Above all that, you need to proofread your story. There are too many noticeable grammar issues for this too be accepted on the site.