Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180319132312/@comment-9041013-20180321003320

My only issue with this is that it is overly cliche'd... "You can be mad in society but you've to hide it" - bullshit idea, people take medication or learn self therapy to deal with their issues before leaving the "pedding". All the visual hellucinations just going worse and worse, it seems like the pratagonist's disease is lack of sleep... there's no problem that causes ONLY visual hellucinations. and finally, "Oh im gonna maim/kill myself to prevent my inner demons from taking over" - so cliche, so overdone, so not good.