Talk:Salvation/@comment-5733573-20180617183948

I have mixed feelings about this. The ending sentence is very strong and chilling, but for the most part, the rest of the story feels like an over-the-top, cliched Holders rip-off. I really wanted to like it more than I did, because it's very vivid and clear in its imagery, but for so much of it, I was just thinking, "Seen it, seen it, seen it." On top of that, it's got a few grammatical issues. These, combined with the cliches, just make the piece feel amateurish and stolen overall, even if it is particularly well-written.