Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25945479-20150102012649/@comment-25959111-20150102231410

I think this story has some real poential, but I wasn't hooked in the way that I'd assume you want me to be. The whole concept is great, don't get me wrong, but I wasn't sensing that feeling of unease or creepiness. May I suggest exploring the depths of what happens after the dream, like describing the corpse's figure, or suggesting that he feels something watching over him. Maybe I just felt a little confused with that open ending, it just didn't feel like it was executed properly. Otherwise I truly enjoyed it! I'll read your other story, maybe that will clear things up? :P Good luck writing more!