Talk:Curiosity Killed the Rat/@comment-24040907-20140918061607/@comment-24040907-20140923051604

My friend, whatever you do, do not use the cursive font! I once read a book called "Tunnels" that had an entire chapter devoted to a letter. The authors chose to write it in cursive handwriting, the result is that I couldn't understand anything that was being said. People will have the same issue if you use the cursive font. Well...I will have the same issue if you use the cursive font.

As far as Marc. I don't think that he needs to be more childlike. His dialogue suits his character and his situation flawlessly. You know, I see him as less of a character and more of a vehicle that I step into as a reader. He is the gateway to the letter, the revelation of the stories mystery. Marc reads the letter, but the letter is really addressed to me, the reader. See what I mean?

I don't think you should dumb him down or make him more childlike, but I can see why the folks at the "writers' workshop" were getting hung up on that. Marc discovers the body of Constance, and the following eulogy of her is very profound and beautiful, not very childlike at all. The eulogy (the one that made me tear up) was the real heat of the story, the real emotional roller coaster ride. Now tell me, would you want to change that?

I know I'm really going against everything the workshop said, and bear in mind that this is all purely suggestion, but I do agree with them on one thing. I think that you should explain just who exactly did write the letter, because though it may be trivial, I didn't quite understand it on my first read-through.

One final note: I reviewed Hellhound Iscariot's story, but I can't find him/her on this site. Does he/she have an account here? If so I can't contact him/her with the review. In the meantime, I've posted the review on my personal blog, and removed his/her message from my talk page, if you can please tell him/her that. The silly goon left the message in the same topic as the administrator's message. I could've gotten banned for that...somehow ;)