Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180714055429/@comment-9041013-20180714094757

Yeah, it's a no biggie really.

I did figure out he's exterminating people most likely after you mentioned him having a single client. So, it wasn't exactly subtle.

The ending killed it all for me, am I supposed to get in the shoes of the random victim guy? yeah, I can't... because I know it's fake and nothing even gives the slightest hint of appeal for me to bother and suspend my disbelief. If you want, you could make it into a monologue from the exterminator that implies he is having an unseen conversation to the reader with the victim. That would end the "oh im supposed to be worried" cliche that happened here.

Also, the rat torture method? is this really all you have Exterminator Man? You have got to look up capital punishment in medieval times. They have some nice and VERY painful ideas. Also, personal suggestion, how about lethal payback rape using a horse or a machine? It's probably gonna make some people squirm even if you dont give out details.