Talk:Why I Can't Have Friends/@comment-36482413-20180806055243/@comment-26444017-20180806060521

I don't think anyone dislikes it. I think it just needs a bit of clean up. The story is based on real events. Good. Reality can be the scariest thing to put on here. And I did say that if Void's name is integral to the story then you should keep it. It's an important aspect, and telling you outright to change it would be wrong.

As for this being your first pasta, that's also a good thing. New writers are always welcome around here. The community is dedicated to quality content, and we just want to make sure that each writer that posts here is provided with the tools to achieve that. Take any criticism as constructive because, at the very least, I know that Jdeschene and I want to lend a hand and let you know how to make the reader feel the experience for themselves.

So, I would say that you don't have to change the story as a whole. I would suggest some alterations in presentation, so that the whole thing feels like a fluid description of events. I'm not saying that that's going to be easy, if you decide to take my advice, but it will be well worth it, and I will help you grow as a writer. As I said, we always welcome new authors around here, and we want to see them do well. :)