Talk:The Monsters Who Watch Us/@comment-26262050-20160529134713

I really do love your concept; it is something that has always fascinated me. There were a few flaws that were pointed out, but I think that some of them should have a bit more elaboration.  Time Era: As The Original Egoist pointed out, your story would have had a lot more weight to it, had it been a bit more believable in regards to how people spoke and acted. For instance, no matter how feral a person becomes, and no matter how quickly they learn, they cannot relearn words unless they're exposed to it a great deal, this is because when the brain dies, it pretty much does a common day "data wipe" if you will. That would mean Sergei would have HAD to use language like that and, honestly, I don't understand how the words "fuck" would equate into a scientific setting. Perhaps if it were a bit more modern day, it would be more believable, but the time and the place...they just don't seem quite feasible. Also, this took course over a span over a little more than 10 years, personally, I'd think the government would be involved, if they weren't already. If they funded the experiment, and it went awry, it would still be an obligation as an authoritative figure to put a swift end to the both the experiment and all the subjects, and, sad to say, most of the scientist. With that being said, your proof of concept is very interesting and has me genuinely curious about Sergei's experiments. So, please don't let these words discourage you at all! In fact, I would love to see a rework of this or whatever you feel the most comfortable with. :3   Overall: A sound 8/10. :D  Also, forgive me for any grammatical errors you may find in this review. I haven't slept yet, so I'm pretty sure there are going to be a LOT of mistakes.