Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26220663-20151018045621/@comment-27012445-20151019170419

This was a hard read as explained in the previous post. What is disappointing is that there was no deviation from the formula of this type of story except maybe the extremely unbelievable decisions Sandra makes. Not to be rude, but, unfortunately, the fact that English is not your first language cannot be the reader's problem. With your stories, you are asking the reader to join you in your imaginary world you created, not to try to decipher what you wrote. No matter how great a plot may be, if vocabulary and readability issues abundant, the story will fail.