Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25714052-20150605053356/@comment-25037895-20150606002151

Since the story is posted on the main site as well, I'll leave off my suggestions for grammar, spelling, and wording revisions. They are on the revision history if you want to check, I find it a little tedious.

The storyline is rather awesome. The only thing negative is, what banning said, the whole Creepypasta-within-a-Creepypasta concept. It would be simple to take it out, and the story would be greatly improved without it.

Everything else, I thought was excellent and original also.