Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160707143147/@comment-27838637-20160710053214

Thanks for the feedback EmpyrealInvective! I have fixed those mechanical issues, and the two story issues that you metioned. As for the setting of the story, I'll make sure to go into detail in my next draft. Kedalup is actually a fictional town made for the story, and in Noongar (an aboriginal dialect), Kedalup means death.

If you think it is a good idea; I am planning to extend on the story a little. I personally think its a tad too short, so I am hoping to extend on already existing paragraphs and perhaps add a couple of new ones.

I'll let you all know when the next draft is complete, hopefully it will be the final one :)

A_O.