Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27857924-20160301004200/@comment-25037895-20160301024958

Thanks for re-writing the story. There's some issues with the story still IMO. It seems rushed. The action sequences go back and forth without any events really hammering home, and the species seem two dimensional. It would be more entertaining if there was more character-development (individuals of the species) and descriptions of the battle. It seems like a great story that's brushed over.