Talk:The Window in Front of Me/@comment-5733573-20181008151430

This story was really great up until the very end. It feels like you ran out of time there and had to rush the last few paragraphs. The nonsensical decision to move immediately based on what any parent would consider a nightmare (broken window or not) just kills the story's believability. I wanted more time with the monster. I wanted at least some understanding of what the window was for and why it was so perfect, even if this understanding was incomplete. Something to hang my imagination on would have been nice, but there's really not enough here at the moment.

As I said, mostly not bad, but it's really all setup with no conclusion.