Talk:An Attempt of Sanity/@comment-25326117-20140909082622

Pretty well done, but I am confused with 'glare' and 'a' with the little girl and the protagonist's interaction with one another. Was it supposed to be 'I glared at my soon victim' and 'before she started a scream'. Maybe, replace 'a' with 'to.' I am also confused about 'soon' in the first sentence. Is it supposed to be 'soon-to-be?'

I give the story a 9.2/10.