Talk:The Angel and the Lily/@comment-26027963-20150528143417

I'm baaaaaack!

To the review:

By elaborating on simple subjects, and taking one very happy tale, you made something dark. I love the fact that the Angel is actually a dead person, and that they are the ones who take them. Of course, nothing is perfect. But that's where we're done with the positives.

While the twist came quick, it almost felt like there was no build-up, everything was just... There. Like a painting. You quickly wanted to get the devolepment done, and wanted to get it done fast. While a good tale, it just didn't live up to what it was expecting.

Sorry Cyan, but you get 59/100. I think that if you added more to the charaters, then it would be good.