Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25987771-20150109031711/@comment-25360281-20150111060923

I really enjoyed this! I feel like it should be shortened just a bit, but the detail is what kind of hooked to me this! Its well done enough to make sense but not over done to sound annoying! The gore seemed a bit too sudden for me as well, but a few tweaks to the wording can fix it and make it seem more blended than BAM gore. All in all this was an amazing first try pasta! A few tweaks and it can really be a new favorite of mine!