Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35515534-20190605053523/@comment-35515534-20190605201742

DrBobSmith wrote: Star Man,

I agree with everything the Wizard said except about the knife. I would take both to combat a monster.

This has more description than 6/2/2019, but not enough for a story. We need to FEEL what the emotions are and we need to be able to put ourselves into the scene. There isn't enough to do that with here. Is Tinkerbell a dog? What kind? What does that imply? If Tinkerbell is a small cat, that's one thing. If Tinkerbell is a 150 lbs Fila Hound, that's another. The kind of knife tells a LOT about the protagonist. Is it a boy scout pocket knife? Is it a dadao? Big difference, but they are both knives.

My impression at the end is that the protagonist is insane and killed Tinkerbell himself. Is that correct? You are correct about the ending.