Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25288624-20140811190730/@comment-24101790-20140811231617

The whole kid snaps and murders parent has been done a number of times.

Additionally this story has a number of spelling ("didin't", "kil"), punctuation (lacking commas at certain points ("She pulled a shotgun cursed me out and fired at me." apostrophes missing a number of times.), run-on sentences ("I then went back ready to kill her, but she had security in her house, she had an alarm whenever any door would open, so when I opened the door late at night, the alarm went off, she woke up, the police came, and I ran away again.")

The phrasing also needs a lot of work. "I then was going to kil my mother, but to my surprise she was expecting me to try to kill her.", "As my dad walks to the ladder, my mother pushes him off the roof, only for my dad to land on his head cracking his head open." (Changed tenses.), etc.

All-in-all, the story really isn't up to quality standards and it's likely to be deleted if it were uploaded for its cliched nature and the issues mentioned above.