Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20161106130313/@comment-27838637-20161113130404

Thankyou both very much for the feedback. I have incorporated this feedback as much as possible and have submitted the story. The only suggestion I decided to leave out was the idea of further exploring the character. The only reason I left this out was because I wanted the reader to be immersed completely. If I was to say 'You were a soldier' or give a specific backstory, that immersion could be ruined. Because it is a second-person narrative, I wanted the reader to feel like they very well could be the character on the gurney. Providing specifics of the character wouldn't correlate with many readers and thus my goal would not have been met.