Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28266772-20160624221243/@comment-28266772-20160629191831

Thank you very much for your feedback! I'll continue to go through and make changes to this for a few days before I post it, and I'll definitely look into the sentence length.

And the name Skit was quite a weird thing that came to me. It was because I knew a lot of people when I was younger who had nicknames which often had the stupidest origins. I'm glad you liked it :)

Also I was thinking of a title for this story. I don't like the name "Just the right height" and was instead thinking of "Cherubim" and including the following (modified) Bible quote at the start.

"Then I looked, and behold, the cherubim. [...] When they moved, they went in any of their four directions without turning as they went; but they followed in the direction which they faced, without turning as they went. Their whole body, their backs, their hands, and their winds were full of eyes all around" - Unknown translation of Ezekial 10:9-16



Do you think this works? Or just adds unnecessary exposition?