Talk:Please, Scream for Me/@comment-31077845-20170209080507

Man, this was awful. If you want people to care about/become involved in your story you need to make your characters relatable, and the protagonist doesn't act like any normal human being would. So he's a guy who, when he hears from numerous people that his son was acting up, and has this repeatedly confirmed, decides the best course of action is to get angry at the large group of people all simply relaying information and randomly grab his kid and drive away (hint: that's a good way to get fired). Then the guy with impulse control problems puts his child in a chair he broke because he's one of those rare breed of idiots who destroy things when they get angry and is surprised when the broken chair is broken and then...attempts to yank his child out by his neck? So not only is our protagonist an unrealistic, overly reactive asshole, he's also indescribably idiotic and incapable of grasping even the basic relationship between yanking on people's necks and them dying.

Was the creepy part here supposed to be that whoever is in charge of staffing this school district let this borderline mentally retarded individual with no self control anywhere near children in the first place? Because otherwise this is nothing more than a PSA regarding not leaving your children alone with incurably stupid, emotionally unstable assholes.