Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29969337-20161130180803/@comment-29969337-20161130223253

Thank you so much for getting back to me, and for taking the time to write such a thoughtful and constructive response. I toyed with the idea of opening with a line that suggests Bobby's school homework is to write a journal (a homework assignment my own son has been given). Do you think that could help? I did wonder about over-egging the deliberate errors. I think you're right, perhaps limiting them to the most complex words is a better idea. It's funny that you should mention the change in age - originally Bobby was six, but then I thought 'what kind of awful parent lets their six-year-old disappear into the woods?'. It seems that came back to bite me after all! I do have an alternative 'deadly' game – I've already stressed that the Skerry has shown he has otherworldly knowledge of magic. Perhaps he could convince Bobby that he can teach him to fly? All he'd need to do is climb all the way to the very top of the Skerry and jump... Do you guys think that is better?