Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-17118109-20140324214913/@comment-24694408-20140325175601

This was interesting at the least.

No noticable mistakes, good vocabulary and it was pretty well written. Also the premise is very interesting and something which I quite enjoyed reading.

If I'm honest though, it wasn't scary (maybe you didn't intend for it to be) and it is a 'wall of text' meaning that it has no paragraphs and this makes it slightly harder to read. It is short but it would have helped if you added paragraphs. If you intend to post this, I would probably refer to an admin beforehand and make sure you check all the rules as well.

Overall, it was pretty good and strangely intriguing.

I hate to do this, but no-one seems to want to help so it would be really great if you could review my pasta: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:279153

I hope this helped.

Bluebunglebee