Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-2175012-20191210221750/@comment-9041013-20191211005517

Hmmm interesting little story, I've to say.

I wasn't sure about how I feel in regards to the independent Eldrich lore you've started with but you've pulled it off pretty nicely I'd say. I'm definitely interested in seeing more of these "elder ones". It sounded mythological enough if I'm being honest, like something you'd see in early greek folk tales; Gaia was the spawn of Chaos, etc.

The plotline seems pretty solid, dude is interesting in exploring something, or is in the mids of going somewhere and we're just thrown into it. The prelude doesn't matter because it really doesn't. Not many writers use this sort of opening effectively.

Also, the way you've used pretty based horror motifs is nice, sometimes less is more and that's good.

I do have to say that D'regorra's name and shape reminds me a little of D'Vorah from MK. Hmmm...

The ending is also pretty good and sensible above all things, where the protag kind of embraces a fate less terrible than just being elder-god food.

Overall it's pretty solid, I do have to mention how you've switched tenses once, "he stands there" or something, instead of "he stood there". I suggest another proofreading.