Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20190430213909/@comment-35711173-20190501000641

Kolpik,

It doesn't feel like a full plate of pasta, more on the mini or micro side. There's no build up, no tension, no horror.

I do think you can go somewhere with this in another couple of drafts. The happy PTA mother at the bake sales.

You do have some loose ends that you can gainfully resolve.
 * Where is her husband?
 * What was used that kills so quickly?
 * How many people died?
 * Who died?
 * Why did they bust her?

There really is a Bland, VA. Are you going to show us any of it?