User blog comment:Creeper50/My First Screenplay Ever/@comment-26054278-20151223003432/@comment-26054278-20151223003918

I think there is a tiny bit of emotion here, but I think if this was in proper screenplay format, as well as extended, it would work better. For example, establish the body gestures if it changes, or maybe their expression in italics/non-dialogue before a line is said.