User blog comment:Senjumaru Shutara/Critique Requests/@comment-25083225-20150411034153

I've been wanting some in-depth, honest criticism lately, so I would really appreciate it if you looked at one, or both of my stories:

The Apoplexy Mirage

A Sum of Dissidence

"Sum" is a lot longer, but more focused in its theme and narrative, so if you will only pick one, that's the one I reccomend.