Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20180927210140/@comment-9041013-20180928093243

As usually your series is pretty much immaculate, aside from a few minor issues. I don't see much you should do with it.

First, you wroted "intrigues" instead of "Intrigued" when referring to Ben once he discovered the Book of Agony.

And I'm pretty certain they say "The Muslim Community" due to the connotation "Islamic" tends to have with fundementalism and radical ideology.

Other than that, I don't see what else you could do with this.