Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25024572-20150322233449/@comment-26030957-20150324175947

I have to agree with Christine. It's good enough that it deserves more work. A little more background, sometimes even a sentence or two is enough to give the reader more insight into the character. What were his powers and how did he lose them? Was it sudden thing or a slow change? Why exactly did he lose faith and become so bitter? Maybe he lost someone dear to him, or just saw too much evil. Also, a bit more descriptions of the scene. Little things, don't go oveboard, like, the scent of the alley, a scar on one of the antagonists. Just enough details to give it a sense of realism. Keep writing, buddy, its looking good.