Talk:A Cult of Metal/@comment-24101790-20170525211750

I enjoyed this as well. Much like your previous story, this was very well-written and I didn't spot too many issues that weren't easily corrected. That being said, some of the dialogue could use a bit cleaning up as lines like: "You I that know you smelled it," really feel clunky and I'm not quite sure what you're trying to convey with that line. Other than that, it was an enjoyable read and I didn't really see much in way of plot that I would have changed.