Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31073921-20170201142604/@comment-31073921-20170201152354

YawningLion wrote: Not bad, but a few things

1) this really isn't about the story itself, but you seem to keep pumping story after story out into the Writer's Workshop instead of focusing on one and editing it to perfection. What about "My Brother"?

2) If the walls are all speakers, wouldn't the noise affect everyone, everytime someone makes a sound? If there's a reason why this doesn't happen, you should explain it a bit more.

3) Did you mean to tense swap at the end?

4) So all the walls are speakers, but there's also a "pane" to see the guy next to the narrator? 1) Yeah I write stories quickly and post them here. My brother was an old story I made a whule back and wanted to see what the workshop thought of it.

2) No, the noice only affects the room, almost with sound proof glas on the outside. Also that sorta is for the reader to guess.

3) What? Come again.

4) Sort of, I guess. Again use your imagination.