Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35522711-20180507234134/@comment-34823985-20180510090449

BloodySpghetti wrote: I like this revised version, ever considered making it into a poem? It does have some issues because we don't know why the happening happens. I think Bloody is on to something here. Your concept works well as a poem. However, the rhythm will need some work. This is just me spit balling here, but it might be cool if you showed the demons' point of view in story form, and the protagonist's view in stanza. That might highlight the protagonist's drastically different view. Just an idea.

Experiment, and play around with different ideas. It's lots of fun. :)