Talk:Squidward's Suicide/@comment-8567087-20140505210608

This story is bad. Nonexistent pacing, constant tense swaps, and detailed descriptions of mutilated children, and "hyper-realism" do not automatically make for a good story. The children especially get my goat, as they don't need to be in this story. If you're going to write horror, make sure you only write one horror story at a time. Lovecraft never stopped The Shadow Over Innsmouth dead in its tracks to have Cthulu or Azathoth show up out of nowhere and do indescribably horrific stuff. Keep your fish people and your Eldritch Abominations separate. The dead kids showing up in a normally broadcasted episode would probably work much better than they do here.

I hereby rate this give this story a rating of two dead children out of ten. Good night.