Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26873355-20151122233343/@comment-25052433-20151124021357

I really liked this one, I guess because I am kind of a sucker for "feels-pastas" as they are sometimes called. You have a great groundwork here for something amazing. What I would suggest is to actually add more to this. Perhaps have more interaction with Luke in the dreams, something then goes wrong which sums up his sensations of the being stillborn. Maybe you and Luke go on some sort of little dreamy adventure and he finds peace. Then you learn at the end who he was. I feel like that would be the pefect gut-punch to send this one over, plus you could add a couple creepier elements to help this find a better home on this wiki.

Otherwise, I really loved this this pasta. I think Empy went above and beyond point out some technical errors, so I'll just end this with the creative points. In the end, I think this will be a great addition to the site, but it simply has so much potential that I'd love to see you expand on it a bit more.