Talk:Tunnel Vision/@comment-5733573-20180912211919/@comment-36393004-20180912212539

I fixed the sentence containing "defeaning", thank you for that. As for it sounding like a picked-on teenager's fantasy, I had to laugh at that. Mainly because of the fact that the kid in the story is me at that age. The only difference is the severity of the beating I unleashed that day and the resulting attachment to violence. (I have been in a fight since.) I was mainly aiming to write a shorter story than I usually do. A lot of mine tend to be over 3000 words and most people don't want to sit through that. Thank you for your constructive criticisim though, and no, I really don't want anything I write to be compared to Jeff the Killer.