Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24949812-20140522004339/@comment-24949812-20140522120653

Thank you everyone who offered their constructive criticism, I can honestly say I will take every point made into consideration for my second one. I won't edit and repost this one, It's already out there, instead I'll get something more fresh going.

I really appreciate everyone taking the time to read my pasta, the next one will be better.