Talk:Tunda/@comment-4715955-20160716111842

I confess I voted for yours on the other site. The main reason being, yours actually grabbed me and pulled me in from the first line. The other one just couldn't manage that.

Also dug the Lovecraftian narrative, despite its density making the read a bit strenuous. I almost want to suggest making the narrative more straightforward, but doing so would definitely leave it lacking something. Regardless there are times when it feels like it goes a bit overboard, and it could probably do with just a little more editing. It makes the story take a bit longer than it normally would to get to the first sign of the unusual, which was also true of Lovecraft's work.

Pretty cool story overall, with a real nostalgic vibe. I might have left the ending more open-ended: the howl at the end suggests the tunda is still alive, and that neither man he shot was the monster after all (it could be interpreted otherwise, but it seems fairly obvious). Ending it by leaving us no clue at all would be a bit more unnerving. Or maybe not. I dunno.