Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32578898-20180416001107/@comment-9041013-20180416094146

WOOOOOONDERFUUUUL Yeeeeeees You did revise the whole thing, though this line is kind of awkward "knowing that my typewriter wasn’t actually moving and that the sound would go away… it would" I'd go with "away... eventually" or "away... I knew it would" Not that its going to ruin the whole yeah, but I just thought I'd point this out.

Also, forgot to tell you how I liked the fact that the narrator chose a horror story, and contrary to the usual mention of horror in horror being well horrible, yours worked well, you've created irony. "I'm seeing a ghost hellucination... so I'll get it to write me a horror book" only for the soldier give him a real life horror story. It did not feel forced or deterred from the story at all. Good job mate.