Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24821182-20140517163041/@comment-4832646-20140517181103

It's good. I wouldn't personally delete it. There are a couple of mispellings (black trash backs?) and the sentences could use a bit of splitting up. There's no shame in putting a paragraph of information in a paragraph rather than a sentence.

The only thing that really bugs me: This guy is ' really fucking stupid! ' "If I kill someone, I'll get laid! :D" That is by far, the worst logic I've ever heard. Then again, considering what you're trying to make him out to be... there's a point there.