Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4875940-20140605030032/@comment-24821182-20140605063602

I think too little happens in your story, and you also seem to be telling instead of showing. Simply listing everything that happened isn't sufficient to draw the readers in; you'll have to create an ambiance. Go into more details about the gruesome effects of the spells, the monstrous appearance of the demons, and the horrifying experience that repeat usage of the grimoires ensues.

Also, I think you should give the narrator more of a personality. He has no defining character traits other than his childish desires to kill specific people (whom I assumed have wronged him), and his inexplicable ability to speak with demons.

Finally, your story looks like it would have formatting errors if posted as an article, and you can deal with these by removing the excessive spacing at the beginning of your paragraphs.