Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26500304-20150621173408/@comment-26475253-20150621182528

Mcdon92 wrote: Sorry but this pasta has multiple issues, you didn't use any capital letters, there are no spaces nor capitals after periods, grammar issues (rattleing, keped, onn etc.) and finally, there's no build up or anything. You work at burger king, hear a weird noise and then find someone dead. That's pretty much all that happens. If you want to make a better pasta, you're gonna need to practice more. Mine was deleted for much less sever reasons, and considering the first mistake is the first word, I don't see this going far. At all. Put this into M-word and watch the red line up, and fix it where it tells you.