Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27594923-20160112134851

I have a story I wrote and need some help making it better.

Once, when I was five (2008), a man appeared from the future. He said he came to stop an event that destroyed half the world. I asked him to tell more about the event, and he decided that he would. He said that there was a man, who made a computer virus. The computer virus emerged from the computer one day and infected the man. He started disintegrating from the inside out. The virus escaped the man's ashes and ran off. The time traveler was here to assassinate the man before he could start the project. I asked him when that was to take place. He said 2015. If he tells the truth, you must be careful, for the virus is unleashed! 