Talk:The Well in the Forest/@comment-25558572-20140712010117

I have both good and bad things to say after reading this, and I'll start with the bad so I can get to the good.

The main problem here is that it's just too long. I feel like a lot of the details, although they enhance the story, lengthen it quite a bit more than may be necessary. The majority of your sentences are quite wordy, so perhaps they could be toned down a little.

I really can't help but feel that the italicized entries could be taken out entirley. They kind of spoil the story and aren't really necessary to it. I would keep the last one, but not the others. Also, there are a few techincal errors I picked out, but it's nothing serious. Just the wrong word used here and there.

So although the plot was, admittedly, somewhat cliched, it was pulled off pretty well with the amount of detail you put in. I like the whole 'well' inclusion, it was an interesting twist on the common thing-in-the-woods plot, and the monster used was an actual animal. Even better!

Oh, yes. And you did great with the actual characters and dialogue. They seemed like real people, to be honest, and that made this pasta more believable- and therefore, creepier. It really seemed like a camping trip gone wrong from that angle.

All in all, this was a good pasta. It could be better if it was a bit shorter, but the amount of detail does help it to be more memorable. I hope it gets more readers!