Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27930893-20160312081235/@comment-27930893-20160312082432

EmpyrealInvective wrote: The story is incredibly generic and borrows a lot from I'm Worried About My Son, so much so that it feels like a carbon-copy of the original story. Additionally the entire story is condensed into a single paragraph and the plot is rushed/lacking description. Couple that with awkward wording ("He holds his severed  teddy bear at his side and stands there.") and rushed plot, and you have a story that is below quality standards. I've never read that story. Now that I have, I understand why it was deleted. I will try to avoid posting stories similar to other Creepypastas in the future and I will work on my writing some more. Thank you for the feedback.