Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20190430213909/@comment-9041013-20190430231250

I didn't get it, Kolpik... usually you deliver more than this. It just doesn't have much. Yeah, there's a bad bad killer but what did she do? Her being sentenced for murder or whatever doesn't make this too much of a horror piece. Maybe if you could detail her crimes as a narrating remark that could work better.

You could go on about Susan making a whole theatrical mock "show" of her trial, detailing her horrible crimes and what not.

As it is now, it's kind of a satire on how we as a society are so into morbid personalities and their awful deeds.