Talk:Not Quite Right/@comment-25052433-20150207030744

I will say with relative certainty that this wasn't written by anyone in the US Military. If this is a concept taken from a foriegn army, then I'll give it a pass, as I am not sure how many foriegn militaries operate in their day to day lives on base.

If this is supposed to be a story of a US Army unit, I would have to suggest that WAY more research be done in how the Army actually operates. For one, salary is based on rank, not base assignment. Sure, married Soldiers get more for housing and such, and Soldiers with Airborne status or other special jobs can get more, but base pay is still base pay.

I also never encountered a chow hall that simply tossed food in a brown bag. Chow halls are done cafeteria style, where Soldiers can choose between a main line (traditional meat, veggies and starch), there is also a fast food line with burgers and hotdogs and salad bars.

A Soldier also wouldn't just "step on a mine" on a garrison base. Such items, if left out at all, would be on speciality ranges where such ordinances were being used for training. While there are cases of unexploded ordinances being found on rare occassion, this wouldn't be something that would simply happen. If it did, there would be a post wide report, and I promise you that everyone would know about it within a day.

Finally, personnel files aren't just discussed over the phone like that.

Reading this story made me imagine a small military, like the Croatian or Romanian armies. Research or clarify a bit more next time.

On the positive side, this was an ambitious short story that I did enjoy.