Talk:The Utopian Project: The Imperfect Life/@comment-25941663-20150517102840

I'm not sure how to feel about this. As a concept it is interesting, but I don't think it was executed well enough. The main character felt unrealistic. From how you wrote 3-4 times in a row that 'he is a very good lier and can spot a lie' to his motives for exploring the building. I don't feel he is a real human being. He is more like a pawn to drive the plot forward in a story which needs a true main character.

But my biggest issue is the ending. It was very ambitious, but in my opinion fell short. If the rest of the story was constructed better it could have possibly worked, but right now it is very confusing. I believe this story is better suited as a longer pasta with much more information.

Nevertheless, kudos for trying to tackle an interesting topic.