Talk:Jeff the Killer 2015/@comment-34403874-20180501231543

This is better than the original, but needs improvement.

1. Make the characters seem more human.

'''2. Take the curse words out, they break the flow of mood in the story. '''

'''3. Make it disturbing and scary, and play with feelings. The only feeing I felt was anger. '''

'''4.The climax is placed at the flare gun incident and not during Jeff's "birth". Change that.'''

'5. The reader is not suppossed to feel good about Jeff's actions, to fix that the author needs to make the events create dread, fear, and anger towards Jeff ''in the reader. '''

'''5. Fix the grammar and spelling. '''

This is a crassic with potential, so somebody please remake Jeff The Killer again.