Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25148755-20140718050027/@comment-25148755-20140718163755

Thanks for the feedback everyone! @ Sy I agree with you about the last scene. I think I'm going to keep the scene regarding the pregnancy but remove the whole lump/scar thing. Like streve said I think the pregnancy is unsettling in its implications but the other part is just cliche and doesn't really add anything. Conceivably the aliens/whatever are advanced enough they wouldn't be leaving tell tale signs of their work. Glad you thought the reveal worked.

@ streve I didn't want to be more explicit with the techniques because i find different things are scary to different people. If I said they were going to cut open his skull and examine his brain, that'd do it for some, needles into his eyes for others, probe up the ass etc. I feel like you can't please everyone so leaving it open ended allows each reader to put their personal spin on it. Also that's an awesomely creative title suggestion, my only concern is it might reveal a little too much of what the story is about (one of my personal pet peeves along with movie trailers that show too much.) I'll definitely consider it though...thanks again!