Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25682587-20150228093443/@comment-26127668-20150301041639

Well, it isn't scary or creepy, but it is, as I said, ironic (maybe at least a tad bit, since he asked for the love of his life, that's it. Never "she'll stay with me forever!" Or anything like that) and sort of one of those "moral of the story" things which America needs very badly.

But, I don't have any changes, it was short, but to the point. Not creepy, scary, or unnerving, so if that's what you were going for, try again, or try something else. If your okay with it being like this, which is perfectly fine!, it's amazing. That's about all I have to say.