Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26894183-20150818000243/@comment-24101790-20150818005205

I'm sorry, but this story isn't up to quality standards. "I" needs to be capitalized. Malapropisms like: prey/pray. Punctuation issues. (Commas missing from before dialogue. Punctuation put outside of quotations. Punctuation missing from the ends of the last sentence.)

Story issues: this is fairly anti-climactic for a micro pasta. Most micro pastas have a strong set-up and ending, but this needs some work. It feels more like a premise to a longer story than flash fiction. Here's a guide on micro pastas.