Talk:The Mountain of the Dead/@comment-5269370-20140708133656

Very, very good. Your description is wonderful and the central character is fascinating.

If I may offer some feedback, maybe allocate some more time to the present tense of the story, and less on the past tense. By that, I'm talking about the facts and figures of the horrific incident. Not that it was bad, but it got a bit tiresome reading through them, and then all of a sudden having an concentrated explosion of wonderful twists in the last paragraph.

Otherwise, great story!

8.4/10