Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37230542-20181018161859/@comment-9041013-20181019115131

So, another kid going murderous and ends up screaming at night, "My name's Jeff"? Come on... kids don't plan very good murders, they do it slopilly and on an impulse. This isn't scary or intriguing. It's literally a smarter re-do of all the teen killer stories because there's no borderline supernatural absurdity in this.

If you want this to actually work, give her something, a loose screw in the head, make sure to mention said loose screw as a reference to bullying or whatever, make the murder and confession stupid (in story), that's what a "crazy" chick would do. Blurt out her deepest darkest secret to her crush without thinking.

Perhaps come up with a gruesome killing method that does not surgical percision cutting.

If you can make it stand as a legit mental killer girl, I'd buy into that.