Talk:In the World of Words, You and I/@comment-25052433-20140826180402

It's lovin' from the oven. Put on your apron and let's enjoy a half-baked review!

What went right:

-A lot actually. Your writing style here reminded me somewhat of Peter Straub, who co-wrote with Stephen King on The Talisman/Black House set of books. Directly speaking with the reader, and serving as some sort of demented tour guide was brilliant and stands out from the norm of writing style here.

-Your tempo and pace were excellent. You kept me engaged throughout.

-Your use of fluidic writing, changing scenes and characters, based on the simple fact that you are the writer and thus the 'god' of this story, made for a unique read.

What should have stayed in the oven:

-Compared to a traditional story, some could say that this one falls flat. However, since you pretty much set this up to exist as it's own style of writing, rather than a pasta, it is hard to compare it to other, more traditional works.

Overall, this was very unique and enjoyable. It was quite ambitious of you to go and create something that can stand alone from the usual style of '1st person styled' pastas. You certainly crafted and executed your own vision here. Well done.