Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33137883-20191005042844/@comment-35711173-20191005210521

Hi,

First, I will say that I like it. It's definitely timeless creepy.

I normally review the English first and then the story, but you have Latin as well.

Latin: Mine is not good, but I doubt if many people will recognize it at all. I'm understanding it as an exorcism. So is the mother saying it? Your formatting needs cleaning up, and did you really mean spir scti or spiritus sancti in "virtus spir scti, concitetur speculum scientia?"

English: You have rough spots. Not many, but definitely you can improve. Grammarly basic

Story: You need to improve clarity in saying that long section in Latin. I'm not saying to change what was done. I just mean saying to make it clear who is saying it and why it works.