Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-2240864-20140612220044/@comment-9340689-20140623011959

Don't make his mother so....RIDDICULOUS!!!

Make the officers ACTUALLY HAVE AN INVESTIGATION AND A TRIAL

Make it clear JEFF LOOKS HIDEOUS AFTER BEING BURNT

Take out the "and suddenly he felt the urge to hurt" and replace it with him having a problem with sadism. That would explain why his parents thought he was guilty, as they knew he had a problem with sadism, but refused to get help because it would ruin their "perfect family" image. However, since we're making the officers do what they're supposed to, don't have them haul anyone's butt off to jail as they do not have enough evidence to do so, yet.

Have his mother telling everyone to "always wear a smile" so that him cutting his face into a smile ties into the story. Make it represent how everyone in his family pretends everything is alright when it's not.

Quit having him say he's beautiful, and instead have him say his face is the ugly truth coming out, let him ACKNOWLEDGE that his face has become HORRIBLY DEFORMED. Make him cry over it at some point!

Heck with the bleach being part of the fire, make him do it to himself in an attempt to "fix" his face and make it less red and pink

Take out the picture and do one that doesn't look like "overly attached girlfriend"

Let him grow into an adult and THEN make him begins to murder after YEARS of pent up RAGE

Liu wasn't even neccessary