Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180921153801/@comment-28428152-20180923052927

I would have to disagree with everyone here about saying that it's too "sci-fi". Why can't sci-fi be scary? Science fiction can be scary as a pile of xenomorph bone-infested shit. My only criticism is that I would find it hard to believe this being a huge sensation yet also being so unethical, as if it's unethical, they would likely want to keep the procedures as far from the public eye as possible. But I do like the concept and I like how there's the mysterious corporate entity that's making them do this against their will. I would just perhaps make the protagonist feel a little more 3-d instead of like a cardboard cut-out. You don't have to go much into his backstory or anything, but give him a stronger voice, some personality flaws and strengths that can take a front seat in the narrative.

And remember, science fiction can be scary as fuck.