User blog comment:Linkotan/Theatre/@comment-4295646-20111002214333

Non-horror? I dunno, man. It induces a kind of horror all right. :x

You could stand to extend the women's conversation; as it stands, the jump from "agreeable" to "monstrous" is too quick. Too eager. If we could have just a few more lines of casual evil, aimed more at the gray area of the moral spectrum, the awfulness of Jeffrey's mother would be more believable.

The dialogue/concept is great, though, and framing the conversation with Jeffrey's boredom is a pretty good idea. Oh, one nitpick - in the paragraph "Waffles did sound", you switch tense and viewpoint improperly when we shift to his little inner monologue. Quotation or italics could fix it easily. Nice story!