Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25012337-20140519232346/@comment-24821182-20140520050443

I can tell why it was deleted. Literally nothing happened. There was no story, just a setting. It reads like a Wikipedia article, only with far more grammatical errors and trivial knowledge.

It's a shame you didn't create a character and have him/her go through this hellish prison, because it sounds like that could have made a good story.

You mention that torture was defined by nationality, but you don't follow it up with some specific examples.

No names or desciptions of people were given in the story, which makes all the prisoners and all the guards seem like unimportant, anonymous tools. We cannot relate to someone we know nothing about. We cannot connect with characters that lack individuality.

Lastly, you seriously need to proofread. I noticed you're unable to spell "prisoners" properly, which is very unfortunate considering we're supposed to care for them.

My advice would be that you take this setting and do something with it.