Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25764026-20141130001630/@comment-24359178-20141202115140

200rock wrote: I have a habit of doing that. Other than that is there anything else wrong? Don't say wrong, it's a wonderful idea, just some things can be made better. For example, when you say there's a loud creak at the front of the apartment, it immediately tells us one of you is going to die soon. The pasta doesn't seem like it would be all that short, so Grace is the obvious answer, which everyone would assume. And you need to make things unexpected. So make it either less obvious there's someone there, or even don't kill Grace just yet, that small bit of surprise and the suspense that there's someone there but no one has died yet will drive people crazy.