Talk:My Baby/@comment-10950063-20140129225226

I agree with everyone else. You have a really nice style, but it's over-written. Really nice descriptions, but they come too often. It's like make-up. I can tell there's a real pretty girl here, but it's hard to see under all the cosmetics.

Again, the flow is good, the style is great. It's just that it starts to trip over itself.