Talk:Head Games/@comment-10502460-20181201074313

Although this is still kind of meh to me personally, it is leagues better than your first version that was deleted. The tone issues have been fixed, there is a clear plot progression and internal world development, "Dr. Smith" has a basically fleshed-out character, and the purpose of this simulated document is clear unlike the last version. So all in all, for something so clearly derivative of SCP I think you pulled this off more than alright.