Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150421064845/@comment-26007602-20150422213210

Yes, the vagueness is important to the story. I'm sort of stuck on how to add more without going too far into detail.

As for the new edit, I think it fits in perfectly with what you up there, while adding a bit more to think about.

The only additional way to improve I can think of would be to think about how to make this a bit more memorable, as that's where the horror comes from, when the readers about to go off to bed. If you can make it stick with them that long, then I'd say you're set.