Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27024716-20150429170039/@comment-26007602-20150429194306

Before you start revising your story, I'd read this, because your story will be instantly deleted for having such a clichéd plot. I'll let that link explain the OC related issues this story has.

I do wonder how our protagonist forgets her mother was murdered by her sister. That's not an event one forgets, especially at the age of eleven. Did she write a journal entry about her mother being murdered and forget about it? That's a huge plot hole.

The father is quite an idiot, catching his daughter with a switchblade and then letting her get her hands on it again. I'm going to say most parents are more sensible than that.

Ema is highly underdeveloped as a character; she is insane for the sake of being insane. There's not even a trigger for her to murder her mother; she just does it because... Reasons? And how does an right year old girl pin down her mother? I don't believe it.

You need a heavy rewrite to subvert the "insane child murders parents trope", as this story isn't very unique or interesting to read. Hope this sheds some light on the issue.