Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26005686-20150114084953/@comment-26005686-20150114184414

Baron Brixus wrote: Sorry, my mistake - I didn't mean that. What I meant to do was to take a quote for a help review. What I was intending to say that, while the story's English is basic, that's of no fault of your own.

But there is a few things I think I could point out that would help you. I would say that the lack of sentence structure is the biggest glare - it kind of drones on a bit. There's also a lack of connectives sometimes, such as "and". But these will improve with time.

Good luck, and keep writing,

The Baron Thanks mate, yea while I was writing, I had the feeling of the sentence structure was a little bad. I will try my best to improve it more better. Again thanks for the feedback :3