Talk:Midnight City/@comment-24663162-20140904222006

The plot was meh, the descriptions were meh, and your grammar failed once or twice. In a story geared towards keeping someone enthralled, you can't have an error throwing them off. Also, you you switched perspectives a couple of times. Not a clue why. For such a meh story, 3/10. You have potential, however. Please do not be discouraged. Work at it.