Talk:The History of the Stars/@comment-10502460-20180214214747

Interesting use of an anticlimactic narrative. It's just two guys having a fairly mundane conversation, with no real twist, but the little falter at the end makes it all more...not quite chilling, but interesting at least. Some of the dialogue is a little stilted, but given that this is your most dialogue-based story and dialogue between young men is one of the hardest things in the world to write, I can give that a pass.