Talk:Resort Connection/@comment-27716587-20160204131449

It's definitely got potential. The build up and pacing of the new guy on the phone was, in my opinion, phenomenal. The writing is done well too. I think the only problem, barring a few grammar mistakes, is the ending. Just explaining that 'oh, it was ghosts' can work if you execute it properly, but unfortunately, it raises more questions than it answers. For example, why do the calls come in on December 13th when this happened in July? Assuming that this takes place in the current time, why do they get calls from both the past AND future? And how does the phone do this? It's too many questions for me to enjoy the ending.

It's a good pasta, however. The ending may have spoiled it for me, but the mystery and pacing are still done very well.