Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28871469-20161023115337/@comment-25477067-20161024182203

Right off the bat, please finish your work before posting here. This is obviously not done, so please do refrain from posting until you are finished with the whole story.

Secondly, the grammar and punctuation needs serious work for it to fit Quality Standards. At the bottom of this comment, I will attempt to revise your paragraph. Also, capitalize your titles. It should be The Fox, the Murder, and the Dam

Thirdly, the story: namely, there isn't any. This is just a character bio for a thief, and it isn't even that descriptive of a character bio. Please work on fleshing this out. What does he look like, what does he like, dislike, hate, fear, love?

North Hampton. A beautiful state in the UK. Home to many and slightly unknown to some. However, if you have been here, you'd realize there's more to this town than meets the eye. Hi, my name's Derek Scrapnel. Shady name huh? I have something to clear up. I'm a thief. If you're rich or famous, chances are you might not see your possessions the next day.