Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26113663-20150202113616/@comment-25941663-20150202120340

In short stories, every word counts. You don't have any room for errors and minor mistakes. You need to make double sure that your grammar is perfect. In this case it isn't. It feels like you were in a hurry.

Plotwise, the story didn't do it for me. The concept of the story isn't that creepy. If this was a longer story maybe you would have had more time to expand your idea, but for a short story this won't do.

Sorry, I didn't enjoy this.