Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24883632-20140509220318/@comment-24077689-20140509224731

Ecuinach wrote:

I could see some freak willing to kill just for subscribers.
 * cough* Onision *cough*

I would like to add something to that:

The way you set this up is laughable. Not only is it as Ecui said and it's rushed but it's like "I ran out the door and then I walked around the neighborhood then I went to my friend's house". The way you wrote this is seriously comedic, like if you tried to publish this on the main site I'd probably suggest you post it to trollpasta.

Ecui is right, man. This is a pretty killer concept a la Funnymouth, but your execution leave so much to be desired that it actually makes my stomach growl.