Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36815674-20181014182908/@comment-36815674-20181014185404

Vngel W wrote: I'm running late, so I can't leave a review yet. Here's what I saw at a glance though for corrections:

My head feels like its splitting in [two], I scream once more. [space] The smell of her perfume hits my nose, as I splash into a puddle.

Her glowing red hair bouncing with [every] step she takes.

She looks back at me[.] I think she noticed me[;] she's within my grasp I can feel it.

She's mine. [space] As I'm approaching her, I pull a six-inch knife from the band of my sock. [space] I slide it into her stomach, pulling it up to tear her flesh {remove --> into}. Thank you. I fixed it.