Talk:When a School Trip Goes Wrong/@comment-30307610-20170906040631

I think this story suffers from the entity that got shoved in here. If you take out the creepy guy it becomes a much better story. Change out the nightmare with a talk about depression and have the kid jump onto the roller coaster tracks and your story has become incredibly real.

There is precedent for this as well. All you need to do is look at six flags accidents.