Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26537256-20160716142055/@comment-26537256-20160717085900

EmpyrealInvective wrote: EmpyrealInvective wrote: Cappka wrote: No, I just don't think you get it since you never finished it. I'm just pointing out a section that might help you understand.

Seems odd that three separate people would misread this story (Me, Jay, and Christian; I misread it until you explained what you were going for, Jay didn't understand until you directed him to our conversation, and this comment here), but it's still an audience issue rather that an issue with the story itself. I think this should tell you something (and it's not that your David Lynching us with an involving story and rather that you're not doing a good job at explaining/building your story).


 * Remember that you had to explain it to both me and (later) Jay. If another person beyond us also had difficulty reading your story, can you really claim that this is due to misinterpretation and not that it's due to poor explanation? It seems like there's a certain point where you cross the line between your story not being properly explained and you just being condescending ("I want to know how exactly you interpret my story. An admin here (Jay ten) and a friend of mine both understand it, so why don't you?").

This comment vs. "I had a friend read it and he understood it, so I don't really get why it wouldn't make sense. What in particular don't you understand?" ~ Absolutely nothing condescending there which might indicate an inherent issue in your story. (Further hint: Someone giving up midway through never implies something you want in an audience.)

How am I being condescending? Why do you think why I'm asking for people to be particular about what they don't understand? So I can fix the story, simple as that. Sorry for being stubborn, but I don't know what to change when "its vague" is the only critique.