Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24189254-20150612000542/@comment-26487831-20150612010317

Oh, and as Umbrello said, breaking up the dialogue into new paragraphs would make the story easier to read. Not all literature does this of course, and it's perfectly valid to have the dialogue nested into the paragraphs themselves, but most creepypasta writers divide them, and it'll make things easier for your audience.