Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26475800-20150624030749/@comment-25052433-20150625033005

The plot for this was amazing, let me start by saying that. I have read a lot of pastas, and many of them have been way above average, but this story's plot may honestly be the most original story I have ever seen on this site.

With that being said, as I know many above have already pointed out, your grammar needs a lot of work. There are too many errors to point out, but at one point you called the Josh character, James.

If I were you, I would consider studying up on proper English Composition for a little while. Learn the basics or sentence construction. I say this because you are a VERY talented conceptionalist, but you are currently lacking the knowledge of basic writing. I would imagine that you are probably an amazing story teller, I can picture your friends probably asking you for ghost stories, because, as I said, you can develop a concept quite well.

So, there stands my advice, as it is. Keep developing stories, write them on your computer or with pen and paper, and hold on to them. While you're doing that, really cram the basic grammar studies, and I promise you, you'll produce some amazing works here.

Best of luck.