Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24821182-20140517163041/@comment-24821182-20140517183336

Princess Callie wrote: It's good. I wouldn't personally delete it. There are a couple of mispellings (black trash backs?) and the sentences could use a bit of splitting up. There's no shame in putting a paragraph of information in a paragraph rather than a sentence.

The only thing that really bugs me: This guy is ' really fucking stupid! ' "If I kill someone, I'll get laid! :D" That is by far, the worst logic I've ever heard. Then again, considering what you're trying to make him out to be... there's a point there. I'm thrilled you liked it. I'll take a look at the paragraphs, and see which ones could be split up. Also, I have no idea how the backs-thing managed to pass me by during all of my 1000+ proofreadings, when you spotted it instantly. I guess your eye is sharper than mine. In my defense, though, you misspelled misspellings. Remember that mis- is a prefix.

I'll keep this thread up for maybe a day or two more, so I can get some additional feedback, and then I'll submit the story to the main wiki.

Thank you so much for the review.