Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44482918-20200205003216

I come to the idea that burno 2 has been chosen but I need some help what can I do to make the story scary

i wake up it’s nice day outside about time to make breakfast instead poping onto my plate a robotic voice calls out”enjoy the meal” ham and eggs again after finsh outside but no one is there no one at all sure they got plenty of things to do to drown out loneliness but it doesn’t work.

then I hear it one of the metal doors has creaked open it’s odd a person here of all places a forgotten utopia of your hopes and dreams but at this point it’s more like a private hell of all things even the entrance admits it with some letters missing and dirt everywhere pausing in my tracks I hear him he heads toward me on wheels “enjoy the view eh mark“ burno says ”why yes” I replay “for a moment I thought it was someone else I sigh“ I guess I have no one but myself to blame.

Unlike what people say hell isn’t some evil landscape where you work forever it’s a place of eternal loneliness.then I see it a human shadow he holds his hand out I take it and shove towards me avoid him and run as fast as I can out those gates I’m free it’s someone else is turn now.

meanwhile I wake up my head is heavy and it hurts a TV set stands by says his name is burno and this is his utopia and unless someone can take my place I’m stuck here burno adds just hope you don’t have to stay here to long opening a door showing people who are insane attacking one another beating them for food burno adds just hope your not one of them 