Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25411513-20140926002434/@comment-25425104-20140926025547

I don't even know where to begin. Your sentences for one seem far too uneducated. You have maybe 10 excellent descriptive sentences through out the entire pasta. Stating things such as, "It looks like it's from the 1800s" is just a very illererate way to describe something. A child ghost (especially female) is also way too cliche, describing her the way you did doesn't help that at all. I do see potential in your writing however. I've came to the conclusion that,  you honestly just need some more time to practice. 2.5/10