Talk:An Ode to Carnage/@comment-35711173-20190624204451/@comment-25941663-20190624211505

Hey, thanks for taking the time to read this!

It is indeed legionnaire, nice catch!

For the comma thingy, I used it as a setter of pace. In my mind, this is a story that needs to flow at a certain pace. Adding commas would either break the pace up, or would increase it. I want more control over it, and commas are a huge part of that.

For the faces/door, I did not add the verbs are/is (blown off) to keep the pace where I wanted it.

Finally, I use a warhog as a war-pig (I probably need to hyphenate it, but oh well).