Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25590539-20141028134144/@comment-24313563-20141028171909

Fixed grammar? Ha! Where do I start. First, the basic concept of this story has been used in the past. The grammar, punctuation, and overall organization was  a mess. The ending was absolutely cliche. "Join us" And the caps at the end is just unnecessary. Now, the story in itself is recoverable. It provided a sense of plot, creepy atmosphere and some character depth. Rating: 3/10