Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24766402-20140415151040/@comment-9967354-20140415151730

The grammar and sentence structure was not awful, and that is good enough for me. But it all crumbles down to a girl being followed, then killed. A bit of a character introduction and backstory would be great. Most characters are like this: barbie dolls who are made for a story and are destined to die. They should have a life outside the story, and thats what adds depth to it. Unnecessary details can actually help a story, because then it feels real.