Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30157838-20180530023530/@comment-30157838-20180602123500

Stings, but yes, the way things read out to other people has always been something I've tried to improve on. I tend to overcomplicate things and reread everything several times over to begin with, so unnecessary details that I see as setting a scene tend to get bloated.

I think it's a not-insignificant factor in making the gruesome parts stand out to people in my work, in fact. Because details tend to get out of hand for me sometimes, I feel it helps in creating effective and unnerving mental imagery, but I understand why people wouldn't want to see that bleeding into the rest of the work.

When I get some time this weekend I'll try to do some rereads, take the advice I've gotten into account. I have good stuff in mind as far as where to take the story, but seeing that many errors pointed out makes me think I should try to improve what I have as much as possible first.

Thank you again for all the time put into helping me improve, I'm sure editing all that took a while. I hope to live up to the expectation, since I haven't had extensive training in writing outside of doing things like this on my own every piece of feedback counts.