Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25622972-20150126171025/@comment-25975226-20150127032624

Try to describe the woman with as many of the five senses as possible. That's touch, taste, sight, smell and hearing. You might not be able to mention taste or hearing, depending on the woman's character, but this makes it scarier. Also, it does feel a bit rushed. This pasta doesn't need to be this short. You can flesh it out a bit and make it creepier. :)