Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26873355-20151122233343/@comment-26326346-20151124061758

I enjoyed it and didn't notice any errors beyond what Empyre pointed out. Description appears to be a strong suit of yours, so I recommend never forsaking it in any of your stories. I don't have any recommendations beyond describing what was strange about the ultrasound photos, but I realize that you may have been trying to build up more to the twist which is why you didn't describe it.

Good job :)