Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26525489-20150623192655/@comment-26007602-20150626233309

I think this is a pretty well written and solid story. The ending still seems kind of abrupt, but as long as you're planning to expand on it, I don't see a problem. I'm pretty sure it stands on its own and won't be deleted for being incomplete. I think this version is creepier and more mysterious, what with the dead "birds" and the note.

You can leave it here to see if anyone else has an opinion or feedback, but I think it's ready to be posted. Best of luck!