Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29514971-20161007095718/@comment-28266772-20161007135028

Hey. This is interesting, and well written. But I didn't really find it that compelling or even novel. I think there are quite a few other pastas that have similar religious themes/messages as well but I'm not sure. I think it makes QS as is, but it might be worth you using this as a basis for a more meaty story.