Talk:Childhood Story/@comment-11791428-20140512033538

Nicely written and engaging. I will say I specifically like how you managed to describe enough about the background without spending too much time on description. I also like the element of subtlety it had to this, especially how you did not say who or what it was that came into the room, seeing as how a weaker story would have done something like having a surprise twist ending that tells youy directly who it was.