Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20180822012506/@comment-9041013-20180823000139

Motherf... Dude, that's a rough one... Speaking from experience of being stung, hell, it's like you're getting stabbed with a smoldering hot nail. Jesus Christ. The whole ordeal ran through my mind... ugh... ffs... So good job on the realistic and highly possible story. Also, if you want to simplify things use Wasps. Wasps can sting you as much as they'd like and they're also hyper aggressive.

I don't have much to complain about in this story, I do have to agree with Bob though, shorten the prelude to a paragraph or two tops... We don't need all of the excess info about the Killer Bees.

Also, props on the ending... that was especially good.

So yeah, I think that you could just trim the fat a bit, maybe fix any mechanical issues if they exist and this is good to go.