Talk:I Have Always Been a Monster/@comment-25941663-20160926024132

Great work on this one. The world you created is phenomenal. I could very easily see a post-apocalyptic saga set in this world. Honestly, I want to know more about the world, the lore, the inhabitants, the creatures, everything. As far as world-building goes, this is breathtaking. If you ever decide to write more about this world, I would really appreciate it if you hit me up. I'm really fascinated with what you've created.

I also enjoyed the format. The bad guy leaving notes to a great hero was a great idea. It had a feeling of a legend being witnessed and it felt awesome to be a part of that. The language used by the narrator and his intrigue for the hero was the cherry at the top.

The narrator's story, with the defilement of his mother and wife, and his descent into the mad religious fervor made for a chilling read. Especially the revelation that after all these years, the mother was still alive was a hard-hitting one.

The only downside I can see with this is the implementation of the cliches. The "I used to be normal" cliche didn't really play a role in this. I understand it was a really hard one, but I expected a bit more. Not disappointing, but rather average use of the cliche. The other cliche, the taboo, was also used a bit disappointingly. Its use though was at least interesting, so it's not a big deal. You could have played more with it, that's all.

Overall, as a story this is phenomenal, mainly because the world is so captivating. The cliches though weren't used to their full effect. Nevertheless, I will give this a high mark. A very enjoyable read, well done.

9/10