Talk:Ted the Caver/@comment-26703796-20150715205717

Everything about this was absolutely gorgeous - beautifully written - except for a few overly long swaths before they went into Lloyd's Tomb where there's no buildup of dread at all. The journal entries with the dog and with the scream from the darkness were good - but certain other ones contain anything to build the suspense. It would have been nice if they were shortened. Aside from those though, this is up there with some of the best pastas I've read.