Talk:A Figure in the Fog/@comment-25975226-20150428030205

I really liked this one. It is obviously a sequel of sorts to your other story, the Wicker House, and I really enjoyed reading this. The characters were well thought out. The beginning was very gruesome and hard to read, but after that the story was very well planned and written. There were minimal grammatical mistakes, and your use of language is very very good. The only thing I had a problem with in the entire story, well I have two things but one is fairly minor, is the beginning. I'm not too sure why we needed the abuse written out in such detail. I don't really think it added to the story that much, because it didn't really alter Jamie's character all that much through the rest of the story (at least to me it didn't). The other thing is that, because I was unsure of the ages of the characters, some of the dialogue seemed a little unrealistic at times. But as I said, that's a minor thing and I'm sure I've done it too. Overall, a really good read. Well thought out and with some genuinely spooky scenes. 9/10 :)