Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26437574-20150926010817/@comment-26996853-20150930173456

I have made sure to read the story carefully, and can say it does have potential. The plot is quite good, but it is your grammar and punctuation that lets the story down as well as some other things.

What I discovered is the absence of punctuation. As I only saw a few full stops in the story and also lack of commas.

You must also focus on homonyms because near the beginning, it is supposed to say "Thinking this was a joke they threw the note away" It is easy to mix words such as 'threw' and 'through' up as they sound the same when pronounced verbally, but both have completely different meanings.

I also felt like the plot was rushed, and more time should be taken with this story. Be sure to read it carefully, as at the first mention of the creature, you referred to it as a male ("the creature scratching with his knife at the door window") but the later referred to it as a she.

I also advise to break your sentences up. Big blocks of writing stops the reader from getting immersed into the story and just makes them want to skip portions of the story.

As I said before, this story does have potential, but needs proof reading and have more time put into it. Some proof reading and time can make a big difference as well as at least a little more detail.

I am aware you are a new writer, and hoped this helped at least a little.