Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24976741-20140526162147/@comment-9967354-20140526163002

This was much better. But it could still use help. For one, why is the spacing so wide?! It's a pain to read. Please just leave a single line in the middle of two parahs. You can leave two for different parts.

I'm glad you worked on the phone call. It's okay now, I think. Maybe instead of the note on top you could just write 'confidential' or something of the sort somewhere over the notes? Maybe you can put some pieces together rather than describing the crime scene. That's all I can say for now.