Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4832646-20140719051908/@comment-24101790-20140719053852

Shadowswimmer77 wrote: I  like the start. Only initial thought is I'd change the name of the town. Dawkson's Creek is just way too close to Dawson's Creek which kind of of ruined the feel for me. I don't see much issue with Dawkson's Creek (Although I did make the improper literary leap to Richard Dawkins due to the story's subject matter.) I like the framing device of a drunken man at the bar telling the story of how he lost his faith. It does a good job of hooking the readers (Sets up the reader's interest in finding out how this man lost his faith), but I can't really give out a lot of feedback as it seems you are about half-way through the story and the build-up and conclusion really make or break the story. (IMO) Flesh it out a little and I can try to get a little more in-depth. Best of luck.