Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27857924-20160303050447/@comment-25037895-20160303075422

"I didn't care about how much he enjoyed stoping (stopping) time."

"he had to put an end to his bad habit or risk loosing (losing) some of his most precious years."

The story is not very suspenseful, I'm afraid. There's little action in the events that take place, more time should be spent on each usage of the time machines and more character development should take place between the father and son. That would make for a more readable story, the ending seems to come on way too abruptly.