Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26976322-20150910232604/@comment-25148755-20150911062958

The concept is interesting and honestly different than what I was expecting (I was thinking ghost girl). Not entirely clear on what sort of thing Alice is exactly so the notion that this little girl would be able to drag a much larger 18 year old down and tie her up seems far fetched. Agree with fizz that some character development could help but if you can achieve Taco Bell restroom scariness I'd say you've succeeded (those things are terrifying)