Talk:The Anguished Man/@comment-25170312-20140726223113

A lot of nonsense. When you say things like "the amount of blood needed to drown someone", you are just distracting the reader by forcing them to try and figure out how much blood it takes to drown someone. I mean, obviously a lot, but how much is enough? Also, it's not a good idea to introduce things into the story that don't serve the narrative. Example: "Everyone has betrayed me". Betrayed who? The guy in the painting or the main character? And who betrayed them? Could be interesting, but fails.