Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29356260-20170702214344/@comment-32461413-20170702223615

Much better! I actually went to store after writing my first comment and seen a package of basil which was unsettling after reading this story.

I still think though that the introduction can be more clever. It's a little better than last time, but still has the same issue of feeling a little cliche. Same with the "it happened three months ago" (also note that from a grammatical standpoint, any number less than 10 is usually spelled out). I would work on finding more clever ways to start off the story than the obvious. Still an improvement nonetheless.

Otherwise, I think you're heading in the right direction. Keep thinking about description and diction choices and some more clever ways of opening the story and you'll be in good shape. I'm sure other reviewers will offer great pointers, but for now, I think you're on the right path.