Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-24381191-20150228190715/@comment-24101790-20150501153242

The story has changed a bit since I reviewed it in the writer's workshop and most of it is for the better. I really don't see any wording, punctuation, tense, or grammatical errors which is a breath of fresh air after a story that was lousy with tense changes and awkward wording.

I would have liked to see a little more fleshing out of the protagonist's plight in conjunction with some of the more innate horror of pet care especially when it is a child caring for a pet (As kids are not the best at caring for animals at a young age...), but I can see why you didn't necessarily want to focus too much on it as it would be a bit of overkill.

The transitions/perspective shifts were a little jarring, might I suggest insert line breakers/dividers? All in all, it is a good addition to the site and I'm glad you put it in the WS where it can get the attention it deserves.