Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25226524-20140820224028/@comment-24381191-20140823150728

Jay ten wrote: Thanks for taking the time to read this lengthy story. It's amazing the obvious things that go unnoticed by the writer, but are picked up on by the first person who reads it.

Pretty much everything you said was spot on. I can't see the capitalization errors though. I think I accidentally used "down hill" subconsciously thinking about how much easier it is to go downhill, but you're right about it being backwards.

I think maybe if I took away the hospital gown, and changed the title, it may not be as obvious that it's a coma. I think the reader may just think it's a dream, and be surprised when he wakes up in the hospital.

Anyway, thanks for reading it and pointing out those mistakes. I'm a little embarrassed that I let those things slip through, but I guess it happens to almost everyone. Thanks again. Don't beat yourself up over it, everyone makes mistakes, and I agree, the proverb should be downhill, but uphill is the correct usage. I think the capitalisation errors were that some words were unnecisarily capitalised, and is 'Doc' supposed to be capitalised? I'm not sure but yours wasn't. But, good job.