Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5413761-20150204221140/@comment-25148755-20150215041359

The work itself was fine. A few criticisms. Missing a capital letter in the first line. The sentence in the first paragraph starting with "My life here on earth" is a run-on. Third to last paragraph "confront of their crying mothers" think you meant "in front of their crying mothers." Last and biggest:  I get no creep vibe from this. It just wasn't very scary.