Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36218142-20180716213957/@comment-36218142-20180717193720

I appreciate you reading through it Bob. I wrote it specifically for those who already had a background in the source material. However, you definitely point out a valid criticism. I can see how it can drag on for those not familiar with it.

Is there anything on the grammar side you can help me with? Thank you again for the feedback.