Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25177838-20140714160201/@comment-25177838-20140714235135

it was original since it did come out of from my thoughts, it may have the same concept but the story and character itself is completely original. but please i would really appreciate it if you tell me Exactly my errors aside from the ones you've told me so i can improve my writing since this was my first attempt in doing so.