Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180911211556/@comment-36393004-20180912121632

BloodySpghetti wrote: Well.. this just gives me too many vibes of a bad Michael Myers impersonation. Sure, I know the feeling, I've been there myself. But come on, he's out right "evil" mental because it suits the plot.

Disonance does not make you evil, it makes you uncomfortable, so he exploads, reasonable... but why is he almost clearly enjoying his new found "neurotic rage mode" if the cause of said situation is something that makes a person uncomfortable.

The ending pretty much kills the whole thing for me.

Please forgive me :( No, it is perfectly fine. Everyone has their own taste and opinions. When I began writing this I wanted to make something short. Too many of my stories end up being long and drawn out. I could expand it to explain why it became so easy for him to readily accept what he has become. I could also eliminate the final line and continue on to show a pattern of mental breakdown. I just wanted a shorter pasta. Something that gave just enough to instill a sense of how unstable a life of being tortured could make someone and the possibilities that could form from that.