Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39934715-20190706161054/@comment-39934715-20190707102139

DrBobSmith wrote: Hi, I will give you some corrections of English errors.


 * Me and my brothers' bicycles wear in direct view now.


 * I and my brother's bicycles were in direct view now.

Although I would shorten it to the simpler and clearer


 * Our bicycles were in direct view now.


 * I went online and searched for poland paranormal legends.


 * I went online and searched for Polish paranormal legends.

This means paranormal legends of the nation of Poland.


 * There, laying in a sitting position between six jars of jam, was the scarecrow.

Thanks. I'll go over it a second time and try to polish the story off. Also, in this part:
 * There, lying in a sitting position between six jars of jam, was the scarecrow.

''I went online and searched for poland paranormal legends. No results. I deleted my search and retyped polish haunted locations. Two hundred results appeared. One stood out in particular: Wędrowny Forest, Ustron, Poland. ''

Polish paranormal legends is intentionally mispelled, as this is the main character making a quick google search on a computer. I felt it kind of made him some more youthful and make him, I don't know, a little more relatable. Just wanted to bring that up.