Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25039889-20140608204403/@comment-4832646-20140608205520

JohannesTrollston wrote: princess, plz tell me wht is wrong!!!!!! It's a text wall, badly spelt with bad grammar. On top of that, the overall maturity of the story is basically... well, sad. Also, there's nothing even close to a good plot that's not rushed.

It's also anticlimactic.