Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25378619-20140904225230/@comment-25378619-20140905130633

Thank you very much for the feedback. Also, thanks for telling me about rhytm, it's actually pretty useful advice.

At first I wanted to post a lot more details, however not everyone likes to read massive walls of text so to make parts more even I decided to describe details of slaughtering the boy later as a flashback or something. I thought that it would help with the development of main character.

And finally, since I find such criticism really helpful I will allow myself to post the next part in the workshop too, it should have some additional material like short video clip or photos. I just need my manequinn head :)