Talk:The Expressionless/@comment-27956926-20160311202130

This one needs a lot of work. The bare bones of an idea are there, but this is too scattered and confused as it is right now. The ending doesn't make any sense in the context. This creature came out of nowhere, didn't do much, and disappeared. There's neither a real story, nor a solid foundation, for this character.

If I may make a suggestion - check out Edgar Allen Poe's "Masque of the Red Death." In his tale, he builds up the personification of Plague as the Red Death character, and delivers a solid story.

I think the character can be something. You just need to work at it.