Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26242189-20170811025843/@comment-32461413-20170813122443

Yossipossi wrote: Done! Is that everything? When a speaker changes, always start a new paragraph. This is in reference to the end of the story.

This is something I've mentioned before, but there really does need to be a motive for the creature to enter the house in the first place. He goes in there with a purpose, not just randomly. Is he hungry? Does he do it for sport? Etc. I'll keep repeating this particular note until it is addressed.