Talk:Roanoke/@comment-25941663-20161130192413

"Instead, only a random word scribbled on a plank of wood was found. Croatoan." - As 'Croatoan' is the word carved on the wood, shouldn't it be between quotes? It's fine as is, just checking in case you overlooked it, since you quoted 'CRO' at the end.

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From the comments I understand that this is a real-world legend of sorts. I have not heard of it so this is a first take.

This was a very good story. Especially "With a hop and a skip, the figure broke through the tree line...". This is very creepy. I think it's because of the "With a hop and a skip". This gives a creepy 'beat', or 'rhythm', to the sentence. It's hard to describe, but it worked perfectly.

I don't know why Caleb became this thing (although it was a very creepy idea), but I think it's because of the thing it found. If that is the case, I would have liked to see something like this: When the tendrils entered Caleb's body, his body would change, becoming more and more grotesque. I think a continuous transformation would have been even better. Even though I can't be certain this would work, having part of the transformation happen in front of the reader is a great way to creep out.

All in all, a very solid work.