Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20180903042947/@comment-9041013-20180903100923

So basically, this got taken down for silly tropiness.

This story is basically a "random madness that has no ground in reality takes over a man and forces him to murder everything in sight". The antagonist has something, but it does not fit ANY medical bill. Nor there is anything supernatural to explain his madness. It's madness for the sake of madness, which in turn isn't very terrifying because it's not real.

Ground him a little, give him a more solid motivation, I'm gonna get his somewhat delirious with some nihilistic, death worshipping philosophy, but make him seem more delirious, or schizophrenic, or something that actually exists in reality. Do your research please.

(Also, the kid should've died first simply out of asphyxiation, or shock; small body quicker death, but that's a minor detail you could just sweep under the rag).

That be all for now.