Talk:Mullaghbrack/@comment-28420405-20160615142249

I was excited to read some of your work. I really like your use of language; you do an excellent job of setting a scene and using it to instill a sense of fear in the reader. I really love your style.

However, with all that lovely build-up, the ending fell a little flat. Don't get me wrong, it was quite creepy, but I think the "action" was paced a little too quickly at the end. I agree with the first poster who stated it might help to flesh out more of the experience in the cave.

Coming from another long-winded writer, don't let length scare you, or else you might not scare us! ;)