Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25504483-20150111212047

Could Somebody Give me some Suggestions or Review This, tell me how to Improve it





HALF HATE 2 (note: the reason I put this in here is so that  I can maybe get it undeleted and get help making it a quality pasta)

 I was 13 years old when it happened. I was an avid gamer and love to play half life 2. But one day I got a big trouble in school, so big that I do not want to talk about it in here, and my parents took away my computer.

 A couple months later my parents gave me the computer back, instantly I went and started playing half life 2. When I got to the main menu, I found that instead of a normal looping scene, I instead saw a group of civilians running down a street, then the sound of a striders warp cannon charging, and then them being vaporized. assuming this was just a scene I had yet to see, I started a new game. The G-man sequence was normal, but the train station was a little more dark than i thought. Dr. Breen did not say any words, and certain scenes were more gruesome, like the scene where the Metrocop closes the viewing slot was replaced with him executing a citizen on the wall. Plus, some citizens had dark spots on their cloths, which I assumed was from the impact of a stunstick. However, after the Trainstation the level of darkness remained the same, with only a few executions here and there, It was when I started the route kanal chapter that I noticed something diffrent. Whenever I killed a CP, they would say “Please, god no!” and other phrases showing indication of pain. It unnerved the hell out of me. Needless to say I continued. When I came to the train car, the vorg and citizen were both dead and the Train Car was splattered with Blood, but the door was already open and I continued on, but at that point, I was SCARED, But hey, I had to get to the bottom of this puzzle, right? When I came to The Airboat, It was a error, but I still was able to get in and continued. At this point the game got normal for a bit, but that all ended With Winstion. Instead of his normal pain, You could see and hear he was bleeding out and he was going to die. I went out to the scout car and It was just a Block of Orange, But the Chapter Was fine. But Again, That all changed at Nova Prospekt...

 After I had reached the outer defensive perimeter and I was going through into the area and what you would see the jail cells, I saw the usual loading screen. except that after loading screen finished, instead of stepping into the normal jail instead I stepped into a room that was littered with dead overwatch soldiers and lit by flares. I walked down the dark hall occasionally walking past signs that said things such as “Why did you have to do this?” and “Why did you listen to him?” Suddenly a room appeared, and I instinctively ran into the room and saw a combine soldier, I went up to him and  saw that he had no weapons whatsoever. He begged me not to hurt him telling me that he and his other soldiers were just following orders. I walked down the hall further encountering more rooms with more soldiers, many said things similar to what the first one said but some of them were different. Some of them were standing over one of their comrades crying. Then I continued down the hallway until I reached an area of glass. I looked through the glass and saw two citizens burying a dead rebel. after they finished the burial they turned around towards me and started shooting at me screaming “We thought you would end this, instead you've caused this unbearable death!” then (after dispatching the citizens)I lost control of Gordon. then Freeman walked into the room filled with monitors, one of the showed a soilder succuming to headcrabs, another one showed Overwatch soldiers executing citizens. Suddenly gordon went and held his  .357 Magnum and put it up to his head, and shot himself.

 I Have yet to find any possible explanation to why it happened. A thorough search of The Files found nothing changed, no new Maps, no lines of dialogue, Nothing. I have contacted Valve, But they tell me to stop trolling Them every time. Therefore, I have reached the conclusion That This is some sort of hidden update or feature.  