Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-33077235-20180922002654/@comment-7064562-20180923012027

'that's kind of harsh"

If you think that's harsh, I hate to break this to you, but the publishing world will eat you alive. Sometimes the best advice is blunt and hurtful because that normally means it's true.

It's also what people tend to say if you've ignored there more kind advice from the start or have failed to put the effort in to improve. There's only so much people can do for you, and if you refuse and write about 10 run-on sentences, you can't expect others to be as zealous as they were from the start.

I suggest checking out your local barns and noble, pick up a young adult novel, and compare there first chapter to yours. See how their sentence structure, punctuation, and basic grammar compare to your own. Try to mirror it, then work on breaking from the molds.