Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29036869-20191025032332/@comment-26444401-20191219054312

I thought this was good, not the best, but a good start. There isn't many Wii based creepy stories out there to my knowledge, hence why I really want to like this!

The ending felt realistic, I would probably stand there dumbfounded if that happened to me. But I would try to stretch the story a bit more, like BEN Drowned; sure the Mii Channel isn't a game, but maybe the narrator's dad got the Wii at a second hand shop and the software is corrupted, and with it being 9 days after the Wii's release, maybe that's why it caught the dad's attention? I don't know, its not my story.