Talk:Christmas Eve Night/@comment-35711173-20190104064810

DxntFearTheReaper,

You have a number of issues with your English. If you did a quick check using https://www.grammarly.com even the free mode will show you several grammar, spelling and punctuation.

If you checked the story with https://www.scribens.com/ you would find five run on sentences. They REALLY make it harder to understand the story.

I suggest you read the following blog entry of mine: Basic Spell and Grammar Checking.

As for the story, I don't get the emotional impact. It sounds like a half remembered nightmare.

My advice is to take it to the [https://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Board:Writer%27s_Workshop Writer's Workshop in the Creepypasta Wiki forum.] Then seriously listen to and ponder the critiques given there.