Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20161130072138/@comment-31532017-20161203093100

Author Notes: I thought about doing a second draft; it backfired me again. In the end, I changed most of the sentences and presumably fixed all of the awkward wording problems.

While observing and scouring across this constantly expanding universe, never have I ever witnessed life displaying this unusual behavior before. They refer to themselves as humans I presume, not a nice fitting name if you ask me.

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Brothers, sisters please control your childish attitude. You know what I'm capable, right? To answer some of you all, I've heard about the reputation regarding these hairless apes. Quite notorious for their violence among others and their own despite retaining high levels of intelligence, I'll have to admit. But ponder for a second, why am I so interested in them now all of the sudden?

Unlike most advanced lifeforms they've adapted countless writing systems. Not an impressive feat you might say or consider, but take a careful and closer look at writings. Perhaps you'll notice that several of their crafts appeared to be done in the form of storytelling, quite similar to what our father does.

If you dig deeper into it, you shall see for yourselves the tremendous amount of effort these creatures are more than willing to undergo just to write out a story is simply astonishing. Sure what they've written aren't perfect yet they constantly strive to portray everything; no matter how big or small as accurately as possible. I can't even begin to imagine the time it takes to produce such magnificent content. Nothing I've ever seen before has exhibited such strange nature.

I've personally spent my time reading their art starting from the most well-known to the obscure of the bunch and I still can't get over it. Little do they know that by creating such spectacular works, they're becoming Gods in a way. Creating countless intricate dimensions, all slightly different from another, I believe all of you have heard about it at least once. Best part is, they're undoubtedly pleased to subject their own creations to simple yet painful scenarios solely to entertain themselves and impress others alike. And you thought our oldest brother was cruel. I wouldn't be too harsh though, being fictional work themselves had its toll on them after all.

--- Hey Jay, if you still think this isn't clear enough, should I change the word themselves in the last paragraph into "of our father's" instead?