Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27707962-20160202051723/@comment-27707962-20160202053213

Also some of what you pointed out are style choices, switching tenses is supposed to add to the confusion around the timeline, phrases like fish outa water are colloquial and should be exempt from grammmar considerations, but more importantly, I'm looking for wider commentary on the content of the story and I hope that I can find that here, so please don't delete this as well