Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29652084-20170823103622/@comment-25052433-20170824031933

God damn that was cool. The whole story had this trippy Shawshank Redemption/Creepypasta style that, well, I've honestly never really seen used before. I can't exactly articulate how I'd label this particular theme, but I can assure you that I enjoyed the hell out of it.

I won't waste time with the technical stuff as I think Empy has already done a fine job with that. What I will say is this story had a ton of heart and the characters were all developed quite well. The theme of "retribution" here is not lost, and I almost think naming this Hollyharson Retribution might be appropriate, as it would serve as the antithesis to the Shawshank Redemption.

The man is guilty of killing his wife. The man is trapped within a mansion instead of a prison. The man finds death intsead of freedom. Redd serves as the stoic voice of reason, always the neutral element among the chaos.

The only thing in this story that I would change would be the "Flash on cocaine" phrase. It just doesn't fit the Redd character in my opinion. I can't say exactly what didn't feel right about it, but it seemed clunky just the same.

Other than that, I loved it all. Thank you for creating this!