Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33488654-20180822020522/@comment-33488654-20180826093247

Steven&quot;SpringBubba&quot;Savoy wrote: DrBobSmith wrote: Steven&quot;SpringBubba&quot;Savoy wrote: Alright, I have restructured my story. How is it now?

I see three monolithic block paragraphs. Not good.

I didn't even read it. Just seeing that last tombstone of text was enough.

Learn how to effectively use a paragraph. This is a good intro, but you should study further. I would also suggest critically reading some well-structured stories and get a feel for how they use paragraphs.

https://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Fatal_Disease/How_to_Start_a_New_Paragraph_Or:_How_I_Learned_to_Not_Make_a_Wall-o-Text Oh, alright then. I tried to break them up a little into more organized paragraphs.