Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24859608-20160305175520

I a writing a story about a man who had to "kill" a child. He's being investigated. Here's what I have so far:

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“Do you know why your here, son.” I said. I carefully observe every detail of Mr.Underwood.

“You’re questioning me about the death, right? I’m going to come out and say it officer, I feel like I killed that child.” Mr. Underwood replied.

 Robin Underwood was a truck driver working with the timber industry. When we brought him into questioning, he measured in at six feet, and weighed in at one hundred ninety pounds. He had these bright blue eyes, and a blonde beard that straggled on the bottom of his chin ever so slightly.

“You’re record says your only 23, just a boy; are you not?” I stated.

“I…suppose, sir.” He said.

“I appreciate your honesty, but that doesn’t change the fact that you killed a 12-year old boy. With such a good record, why would you do such a thing?” I said, a little confused.

“I didn’t kill the child sir, let me explain!” Underwood raised his voice. He looked like he was about to either cry, or try to attack me, I wasn’t sure.

“You just said you did! Lying to a detective will only make things worse.”  I started to shout.

“i never said that I killed the child, it’s just…”

“It’s just what?” I aggressively cut off his sentence.To me, I believed he was trying to rationalize whatever he did. as the right thing to do.

 “It’s just, I feel like I did. If you would let me explain my story, I can be of help to you.”

“Alright, but make it quick.” I calmed my tone of voice down significantly. I tend to fly off the handle in these interrogations sometimes. He starts to tell his story.

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How is this exposition, I want to know so I don't end up failing to launch. The goal here is immersion, which is why I tried to make a good portion of the beggining a conversation.  