Talk:Poor Despair/@comment-24040907-20150206214601

My friend, you are really good at metaphors! "Dark, puffy pillows crowded the sky", "By now, she was terrified, her terrified suspicion growing like mold." Holy cow, those are some good lines!

It must be one of the worst jobs in the world, to have to go out putting down cursed dogs in a city cursed by darkness. I'm not sure if the dog was pregnant or not, or if the curse was lifted in the end, but Darren's final actions really sum up the story for me.

The ending was done well. The symbology tied to the sunrise gave closure. Nice work!

Rating 5.95/10 (Please note that I am not a judge in the 2015 Creepypasta Freestyle Challenge, I am merely a critic, and my rating is solely a reflection of my personal opinion, and does not effect the competition.)