Talk:The Friday Ad/@comment-25425579-20140919205429

not bad, I just have one thing to nitpick. Putting actions in between asteriks like this *throws table* is NOT ok. If you absolutely have to be lazy, at least put 'she sobs' or something. I'm surprised you haven't been grilled on this already. As for the story, I'd say 8/10. Nic e job.