Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30692969-20161206185743/@comment-27905100-20161207004506

There’s a lot that the human race has uncovered. We’ve found tombs of men(I feel like this would be more impactful if 'men' was 'kings'.) long dead, we’ve found full civilizations dating back millions of years. We’ve done a lot and discovered a lot(This sentence is redundant and awkwardly worded. Take it out.). Some things we’ve done were not so good, some were amazing (This sentence is awkwardly worded and doesn't resonate. Swap out some adjectives for stronger, more impactful ones.). Then, there’s the in between. Things that we’ve never learned about in a school, in a textbook, things that we find on the internet. We find these things from rumors, from word of mouth. We learn these things from being so bored on a computer that you just start clicking around, indiscriminately picking links that read(This should be 'lead') to more links that lead to yet more links.

Eventually, our boredom gets to the point where we just mash the keyboard, finding words not yet created, keywords that lead to more obscure websites. We finally reach the point where it doesn’t matter what we find, we just know that we found something on some probably non-credible source website (This sentence is awkwardly worded, and doesn't flow well.). When we find it, we usually instantly click off. We find another thing that catches our eye, throwing us miles away from something that very few people had probably seen. Yes, we are one click from returning to that website, but in our apathy to everything on the screen, we don’t think to uncover these websites, pushing them back down into the depths of the internet, waiting to be returned to by some unknown human being who will probably do the same as us.

Most of these websites are never returned to, remaining buried until the final day of the internet when it is(This would flow better as 'it's'.) finally shut down. This day is very far away, but it’s inevitable. We know it will come, we can’t deny it, but when our internet access is taken, we’ll break down. We’ll return to our primal state, being forced to re-evolve(Not a word.), fixing what we destroyed. We never know when it could happen, but I digress.

These websites could hold keys to finding amazing things that could make any good human rich. These websites are far and few inbetween (I believe the term is 'few and far between'), but they exist. Next time we flip through pages, we won’t be thinking of this post, we’ll be thinking about what we’re seeing at that current moment. We’ll fail to recognize that we are contributing to the instant downfall of humanity, indiscriminately burying these websites deep underground in the depths of what we call the internet.

We are killing the human race.

All of us.

Huh. I don't normally read this style of pasta, but the story was pretty good, especially for your first pasta. The one thing I have with this pasta is the fact that it never establishes a connection between tiny sites on the internet and the human race. (I assume there's some sort of information treasure trove on them?) Anyway, that's pretty good, and I enjoyed this. Good luck with this.