Talk:Ticking/@comment-25052433-20150520055336

A very good story that was short and to the point. My only gripe about it is your choice to use 2nd person. You were way too specific to write in that style.

Example, I don't read before bed, nor do I have a loud ticking clock in my bedroom, so both of those sort of distanced me from the story right away. This would have likely worked great in 1st person, and would have been stellar in 3rd, but that is just because I love 3rd person writing and think everything looks better in 3rd.

Overall though, good short pasta. I enjoyed it a lot. Keep writing.