Talk:The Lake of Souls

I personally liked it overall. Some of the wording might be a bit overly-dramatic (but you might want to get a second opinion before you listen to my word on that; it might just be your style), and the third paragraph could definitly use some dividing up, but both of these are fixable problems.

I liked how it seemed like the (possessed) mother in the lake at first, and then it changes up on you. And you didn't focus too much on the blood and gore part at the end. A decent first pasta :)

I feel a bit odd asking this, but I've also written my first pasta and recieved no feedback; mind looking at it? It's called "The Devil's Chord." StillDeciding (talk) 14:00, September 30, 2012 (UTC)