Talk:It's Golden/@comment-26475800-20160118031908

The issue with this story is that it is just dictating facts. There is no feelings towards the husband or the wife, so who really cares. It becomes something that relies on the punchline, but this has been done before, so it wasn't that shocking. However, there is some potential with this story and you could do much better with it.

Keep writing and see what you are able to come up with. I'm sure you will become a great author before too long.