Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26234922-20150322235845

 Katie fell into a bottomless pit, a cesspool of misery. All that ran through her mind was her imminent death. Her eyes snapped open to the surroundings of her room. She sighed. That was the third time she had that nightmare this week. Light streamed through the curtains and she heaved herself out of bed. Another school day, another weekend of homework ahead of me, she thought. All in her house was still. Suspicious, she looked at the clock. It was 6:50 in the morning. Of course her mother would be gone for work already. Katie made her breakfast and walked to school. There was a build-up of traffic to her high school and she was forced to take the shortcut through the slough, as usual.    Usually when Kate took this path, it was beautiful and serene, but this time...something was wrong. The crushing pang of fear paralyzed her. Something moved, rustling the trees. Her eyes widened.

    “Is someone there?” She asked, petrified. Kate knew this was a horrible question to ask in a situation like this, there was  always  someone there. A girl about her age popped her head out of the bushes. She had lightly tanned skin, toasty brown hair and sparkling brown eyes. She had a button nose and red lips with her shoulder length hair in a cute hairstyle where two parts were tied in the back, while the rest hung loose.

    “Hi!” the stranger said and stepped out from behind the trees. The first thing that got Kate’s attention right away was the girl’s bright red neckerchief. She wore a large dark blue hoodie over her shirt, that seemed to have white ruffles at the end and black jeans. Her shoes were red with black ribbon around the top of the shoe and the small wedges were black as well. She smiled sheepishly, “I didn’t mean to startle you, my name is Robyn Red,” she said offering her hand. It was completely enveloped by the sleeve of the hoodie. Hesitantly, Katie shook it.

    “My name is...Katie, but most people call me Kate.” Something was off about Robyn, Kate could just feel it. She also seemed familiar, like she’d seen her in the news before, or something like that. A low growl broke her train of thought. It had come from Robyn’s stomach.

    “Pardon, I haven’t...eaten in some time.” Robyn said, looking as if she was fighting some internal conflict. The insidious feeling crept up on Kate once more. She couldn't stay any longer.

    “Well, I need to be going to school...soooo…” Kate left hurriedly, but was yanked back by an immeasurably strong force. Pain shot up her arm as sharp talons dug into the tender skin of her forearm.

“Leaving so soon? Oh, I thought we were going to be friends.” The voice was familiar, but more sadistic and taunting. Kate spun around and it was Robyn...but she was not human. Her eyes were red, the pupils dilated and the sclera was completely black. Her smile spread throughout sharp rows of teeth. Her skin was so pale that it was white. Her hoodie was completely off, so that the bloody hole in her chest was visible, right where her heart would be. Kate could see Robyn's broken ribs and part of her spine. The sight nearly made her vomit. Bloody made her queasy. Her shirt was white, but stained with blood and a thick black ribbon encircled her waist.. It in fact, did have two layers of ruffles at the bottom. The sleeves came to right above her elbow, made of diaphanous red material with black cuffs at the bottom. She had ink-black talons, stained crimson with Kate’s blood. Terrified, Kate pulled away and the chase was on. As soon as Kate made it to where other students were walking, she turned and looked back to see if Robyn had followed her, but she was nowhere in sight. Kate breathed a heavy sigh of relief, but regretted it as she suddenly became very dizzy. She peered down at her tattered sleeve. It was soaked in blood and there was a large gash where she had gripped her. She had been losing blood the whole time as she ran. That isn't good, She thought, and the world faded in and out of focus. She vaguely remembered students rushing toward her before everything went dark. The steady beep of a heart monitor brought Kate back to the world of the living. Her eyes fluttered open and she saw her mother, brows furrowed in worry.

<span style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">    “Katie, you're awake!” she said with relief and hugged her, careful to avoid her heavily bandaged arm, “Are you okay?”

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;"><span style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">    Kate didn’t really feel any pain, “I guess so...what happened?”

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;"><span style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">    “You don't remember? A few kids called the ambulance for you right after you fainted. I was called and told that you were viciously attacked.”

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;">Kate's face went cold. Viciously attacked… Sharp teeth, laughter and blood flashed through her mind, but that glimpse of a memory was gone as soon as it came. She didn’t remember anything after leaving the house. <u style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">Not a single thing.

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;">Later on in the day, she was free to go back home, but she wasn't allowed to go back to school until a few days after. She groaned, knowing that she would be waaay behind the rest of the class and again, be scrambling for extra credit every chance she got. Kate didn’t like school at all, which is why she wanted to ace every class and get the heck out of there when the opportunity presented itself. After three days of lounging around reading books, she was allowed to go to school again. The day dragged on like usual, but this time Kate’s mind wandered very often. Unconsciously, she would scratch at her desk and by the end of the week, she'd made a decent dent in it and her fingernails were ruined, the flesh of her finger raw and slightly bloody. Kate was sent to the nurse’s office and she got it cleaned, disinfected and wrapped with a bandage. During PE, someone cut their finger while handling the sport supplies and Kate felt her pulse quicken. Her vision became red and all she felt was overwhelming hunger. The coach stepped in and walked the person to the office. Kate shook her head, shocked at what she had been thinking of.What is happening to me..? In her sixth period, she was very moody. A classmate asked her a simple question. When she didn’t respond, they asked again and she snapped at them. The whole class looked at her. At that moment, Kate just wanted to melt into the seat and go unnoticed. The school day was over, but she still had mountains of homework and classwork to deal with. By midnight, she was half way done… with one out of six subjects.

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;">Burnt out and dazed, she decided to go to bed. Changing out of her clothes and putting her long auburn hair into a braid, she put on a baggy grey t-shirt and pink and grey polka-dot pj pants. She stumbled to the bathroom and brushed her teeth. When Kate finished, she flopped onto her bed, not bothering to pull up the covers. It was a warm night anyway. Images of gore, laughter, serrated teeth and glowing red eyes haunted her nightmares. Mirrors shattered and blood seeped from the walls. She tossed and turned as the images intensified. Eyes glowed, Robyn’s inhuman eyes, and Kate became hypnotized. Come to meeeeee…. Her voice beckoned. Kate shot up in bed, covered in cold sweat, her blankets tossed all around her. Her breath came in heavy puffs. She cradled her head in her hand, trying to calm herself down. The trees outside of her window swayed in the gentle wind. The window was open and walked towards the open panes of glass with the intention to close it, but her body did otherwise. Kate found herself climbing out of the window and jumping off of the roof onto a car below. The car alarm went off and she fled. She walked for hours on end, having no idea where she was going, her feet bleeding due to stepping on glass and the constant irritation of uneven concrete paths and sharp leaves. Finally, she found herself in the forest. Laughter rang all around her. Kate felt hands on her shoulders and she jumped, a white taloned hand covering her mouth before she could let out a scream. A low satisfied purr rattled her ribcage. When Kate showed no signs that she was going to struggle or scream anymore, the taloned hand turned her around and she was face to face with a monster of a human girl. Her eyes were red, her black pupils dilated and the sclera was completely black. She had a button nose and red lips with her shoulder length hair in a cute hairstyle where two parts were tied in the back, while the rest hung loose. Her bright red neckerchief tied around her neck stood out starkly from the rest of her attire. Her smile was full of needle-sharp teeth. Her skin was a pale white. There was hole in her chest, right where her heart would be. Her shirt was a faded eggshell white, but stained with blood and a thick black ribbon encircled her waist, with two layers of ruffles at the bottom. The sleeves came to right above her elbow, made of diaphanous red material with black cuffs at the bottom. Kate’s eyes widened as the memories came rushing back to her, the scratch, her voice, blood… <u style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">my name is Robyn Red…  And then it came to her. She was the girl who went missing a while back when they found that body with the eyes hollowed out and the heart missing...

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;"><span style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">Robyn held Kate’s face tightly, turning it from side to side as if she was...evaluating her, “It’s a shame really. You would have made a fine proxy, but hunger considers no one,” She said smiling cruelly as she plunged her hand into her chest. Kate gasped as Robyn ripped out her heart and let her go. She fell to the forest floor gasping for air, but everything was getting darker.

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;"><span style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">    “Goodbye, Katie!” Robyn said before Kate faded into death. Robyn devoured her heart and burped heartily. She chuckled then peered down at the body of Kate.

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;"><span style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">    “Oh dear, what a mess…” She said licking the blood off of her talons and sauntered off, leaving the body there to rot. =                    <u style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">  <u style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">POLICE REPORTS STATE: = <p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;">“'''A girl by the name of Katie Adams was killed recently. Sources say that her body was found in the forest a few days after her death. She was in her night clothes and her heart was ripped out, but is nowhere to be found. A string of these sort of killings has been going on and officials suspect that a mass murderer is at large. They have yet to find the motive and the perpetrator. More on this topic later at night-'''”

<p style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);font-family:Verdana,sans-serif;font-size:13px;line-height:19.5px;"><span style="-webkit-tap-highlight-color:rgba(0,0,0,0);">Kate’s mother turned off the TV, cutting of the reporter’s statement. She sobbed.

My precious baby is gone..
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