Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36095001-20180827035500/@comment-24101790-20180827044028

Here's my reply:

"First, filler. It's just flat out boring and uninteresting to read, and I don't but them in my pastas because of that." You're right, filler that doesn't advance the plot or build characters can be boring. Detail that enhances the story on the other hand is not. Without creating an engaging story, it is incredibly uninteresting and weakens the overall plot. Take this line from your story for example:

"I hesitated for a moment. ... ... ...and then I jabbed it into my eye. Blood was everywhere, I was whelping (sic) in pain and fell to the floor holding my eye. "What a shame." He (he) said... then he stabbed me in the stomach."

This is rushed and does nothing to advance the story. Given that the plot up to that point is basically a person forcing their way into an apartment and telling the protagonist to stab themselves in the eye, it comes off as extremely anticlimactic. To put this into context, it would be like watching a supercut of a horror movie with only the jump scares left in and assuming that since it includes the basic scares that it is superior to the original film which (hopefully) builds up to those scenes.

It should be noted that that scene is the climax of your story and instead of building tension you just add ellipses to denote a pause without adding anything thematically. Also in addition, whelping. Definition: "(a female dog) give birth to (a puppy)." The word you're looking for is yelping unless there is something we as the audience don't know about this knife.

I was going to go through Red Ink as well and point out the numerous capitalization, awkward wording, tense shifting, and plot issues (a relatively generic plot that comes off as bland due to listing off events without building up the story), but I noticed that other people have commented on your writer's workshop posts with that information which you're conveniently ignoring (See: TheWizardOfTheWoods and Squidmanescape's posts in particular).

A final note I'd like to address is your line "I am saying, i'm quitting this wiki. It's where creativity, and all inspiration dies, because the rules are too strict and people take these imaginary stories WAY too seriously." If by taking imaginary stories way too seriously, you mean bothering with basic grammar, spending time to create atmosphere/tension, and an engaging plot, then I'm afraid you're in for quite the rude awakening when you find out other sites are focused on quality. The ones that aren't have a tendency to go dead after a few weeks as it turns out people really don't want to bother spending time reading stories that the authors themselves don't want to bother with.

Best of luck in your writing endeavors.