Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27008899-20151104052955/@comment-25148755-20151104160926

I like the concept (there are some grammatical issues...you use 'their' several times when it should be a singular possesive like 'his'). Unfortunately there are some big logic flaws that kind of ruin the whole thing for me: first, it seems that whatever number is being called is not this individual's wife. This would indicate that the man does not know his wife's phone number, since he has dialed it  many times throughout the story. Secondly, the ending of him being in the woods indicates he is using a cell phone...so how is the number wrong? Did the wife, or possibly the doctor, change it? This seems unlikely since the doctor goes to the trouble to then call the wife at the end and let her know that everything is fine...indicating they are not in collusion to kill the husband. All of this also begs the question why there is so much time between the calls if the husband thinks something is wrong. Why he can't simply leave (ostensibly he drove himself there)? Why doesn't the narrator doesn't call the police after the messages get weird? Why does it always go straight to voicemail? The first couple messages are pretty normal...why wouldn't the narrator pick up the phone and tell the person they had the wrong number? I dunno, all this stuff just sort of ruins it for me.