Talk:Why Sarah Never Sleeps/@comment-25352337-20140828145730

I think you have a decent story here but I agree with some of the others that the ending seems a bit rushed. While I love when a tale leaves the reader wondering and imagining what horrors lay beyond, I feel that you may have erred on the side of under-explicitness; in particular, the ending and description of the hollow man. Perhaps a few choice phrases could have increased the terror when the door latch clicked and opened, or you could have provided a few more clues at the end to suggest the sinister nature of Sarah's fate and phobia.