Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-1306136-20140404154657/@comment-24841494-20140404160425

I think you should change maybe the last third of the story, and go with a more supernatural, abrupt twist, like you said.

Instead, you could "end" it with "And then my smile died"

Then have an epilogue were it is kinda of a news report type deal. "Harvey Cooper missing; strange leather bound book found in library, where is was last seen."

Of course, you could put it a lot more eloquently than I; since I wrote that in a minute or two. This will make the ending more abrupt, and more likely to stick with the reader. To me, the serial killer part at the end killed it for me. However I loved this story.