Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26044574-20150126041423/@comment-24101790-20150126044350

I can see a few issues here. First and foremost, there needs to be spaces after punctuation. "clearly.She", "row,almost", "hands.She"

Plural/punctuation issues: "toy’s" should be "toys" (as you are not using it as a contraction or using it to indicate possession.)

Story issues: The plot comes off as un-necessarily vague: "...powerful.His name will be stated later,for it is considered...unimportant at the current time.Humans..." You never name the entity, give its intentions, or really build on it other than implying it is malicious.

Then there's the ending: "strike.But(sic) we aren't always toys.We’re(sic) people,too.(sic)" I'm not sure where you were going with this. You imply heavily that these toys are watching/waiting for the (unnamed) master's orders, but with the last line you imply they're human and not actually a stuffed rabbit. (as you describe earlier: "...pretty little faces,floppy ears and sloppy thread-sewn eyes constantly looking...") It seems a bit like you were unsure of how to end this. Maybe you meant to reveal how these were once people turned into dolls, but if that is the case, you need a lot more description/explanation.

Your other story had the exact same punctuation/spacing issues and also didn't use apostrophes when using contractions. (As is visible in the title of this post)