Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26475800-20150624030749/@comment-25037895-20150624054918

This needs a lot of corrections before it would meet QS, there's a lot of wording, punctuation, and spelling issues. I was going to point them out, but was I disconnected and lost them. I would suggest a solid proofread before uploading (the story is littered with them). IMO the story the drags on, while the topic is interesting, there's a lot of fluff in this story. Sometimes leaving out some of the details is the best way to build tension. It's a good concept though.