Talk:The Country Road/@comment-25226524-20140817022946/@comment-25226524-20140817041256

It looks like you pretty much got it. I'll read it again tomorrow when I'm fresh to make sure. One thing that's left is those two stand alone lines above the last paragraph. They still read as present tense. I would recommend adding quotes and saying 'I thought to myself', it would look like this

"Oh God, please let this be a dream." I thought to myself.

"Everyone else is dead, they're all dead."

I think there still may be an issue with you're closing line, but my brain is too foggy to pinpoint it exactly (I'm not much of a night owl). Read it over a few more times and see if you notice anything awry with it. Kudos on putting in the effort to get it right, keep up the good work.