Talk:Health Insurance/@comment-5733573-20180512171331

I really liked the suspense in this story, although I don't think the format does it any favors. The big paragraph of explanation at the end just sucks all of the wind right out of it and makes the whole thing feel disappointing in retrospect. It would have been a strong choice to pepper the story with clues throughout, eliminating the need for so much exposition at the end.