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In one home, five people were killed with their hearts and kidneys missing. On one wall, nighty-night was written by blood. But four months earlier, a teenage girl escaped a mental institution by the nearest town.

Raven, which everyone calls her, but her real name is Destiny was a fourteen year old girl with long dark hair and dark eyes were on her way to school. She was on the bus then a boy behind Raven was yanking her hair calling Raven names that really insulted her. Later that day Raven was in her room by herself thinking of that all of her life she has been insulted, bullied, and alone. That’s the last straw, Raven thought, then a small voice in her head started to comfort Raven by telling her that everyone who made her feel rage was going to die. Raven smiled to herself knowing that the first victim is going to be that boy.

Later that night, Raven put on a white crop top with a hunter green jacket, and her black pants rolled up. Raven was in her bathroom with a pair of scissors cutting her hair to a bob with bangs over her right eye and barely touching her collarbone; then left the house with a scalpel in her hands.

Raven knew where the kid lives so she walked a short distance to that house; walked around it till she found an open door or window, but that open window lead directly to the boy’s parents. Instead of thinking of this as if they were in the way, Raven thought of this as a good thing. While they were sleeping Raven cupped her hand on the mother’s mouth and slit her throat, for Raven did the same to the father. Raven started to giggle as she was enjoying this. Raven left the room to find the kid. Raven walked for a while till she found the kitchen. The voice told Raven to get a bigger knife, so she rummaged though a drawer. Raven pulled out a knife and saw the reflection of her; Raven stared at her as she noticed that eyes shrunk very small. Raven put down her knife and started to sob.” Why am I doing this?", Raven told herself. "Because you wanted revenge”, a voice replied, but it wasn’t the voice as the other one, this one had a raspy voice behind it; Raven turned around to see no one around her, but Raven knew that she was alone other than that kid, The voice told Raven that it was her that said that, so she believe the voice and continued on. Raven went to the kid’s room and opened the door then peeked inside and saw the boy sleeping like he’s in peace, well that’s not going to last long, she thought to herself. Raven stepped inside the room, but her foot makes a creaking sound on the wooden floor. Raven started to curse herself but she saw a flashlight beam on her. Raven looked up to see the kid staring at her with horror. Raven smiled then said,” you know what’s a real pity was that you pulled my hair and that really hurt me,” Raven pouted then she looked at her knife and said “I’m just here to return the favor.” The kid got up from his bed and took off running to his parent’s room. Raven thought this was amusing so she let him go then Raven ran after him putting her knife against the wall to make a scratching noise. The kid ran till he got to his parent’s room and he stopped to see that his parents are dead. He stared at his mother and father with horror. Raven caught up with him and smiled when she knew that the boy was scared, then she said,” You did took something from me that was precious to me.” the boy looked at Raven terrified as she came face to face with him then she said, “Your mother never let you stay up this late, Yes? So I’m going to do her a favor, Nighty-night!” Raven brought down her knife and stabbed the kid in his heart. She threw her head back and laughed then said, “Aw, that didn’t last long. I was hoping that it would last a long time, it was fun though”

Raven walked around the house then her stomach growled, so she patted her abdomen and said,” I wonder if they have anything in the kitchen". Raven walked towards the kitchen then she heard a loud scream so she put her hands on her ears and dropped on her knees. The voice urged her to eat the bodies. Raven was yelling no, so the voice sent another scream. Raven finally gave up, so she stood up and walked towards the room with all the bodies in it. The voice started to chant, “Do it” louder and louder till she couldn’t stand it. She stood in front of the small boy and took her scalpel and cut his throat and to his waist; blood got on Raven’s hands but she didn’t care; then opened his rib cage and took his heart. Raven stared at it for a while then she took a bite. The heart tasted really bitter; then the aftertaste was tolerated. Instead of gagging of her actions Raven continued on what she’s doing, and took her hands and shoved it further inside the kid’s body; she located the kid’s kidneys. Raven threw away the intestines and took both kidneys and bite into them. Raven thought they were the best part of the body's other than their hearts. Since Raven did the same to both parents, she left the house satisfied.

The next day Raven was in school, but instead of the usual routine of school, everyone was talking about last night’s incident. Because Raven smiled all day than usual, everyone was questioning her. Later in the evening, her mother felt uneasy because Raven’s father was storming around the house smashing everything. Raven always hated this man for what he did to her mother; He would always boss her mother and called her names. Raven did everything she could to protect her mother. One day Raven made a mistake of taking one hundred dollars from her father’s wallet to pay a night in a hotel for her mom, for after they returned Raven` s father smacked her mother` s face with the back of his hand. All these memories came back to her as her father was yelling at her mom telling her that he wanted pizza instead of steak. That fool, does he know what my mom is doing for him all these years, Raven thought to herself.

Later that night, Raven got up from her bed and put the same clothes she wore last night. She went to see her father sitting on the couch, watching television. She went behind him and said, “All these years, which my mother had to put with you, we never liked you, you filthy Bastard! Nighty-night! “She brought down her knife to his chest and she pulled her knife down to his waist. Her mother came in to she what Raven was screaming about. She gasped as she saw Raven covered in blood, and then she let out a loud shriek as she noticed that her husband was dead on the couch. She stared at Raven with horror as she said, “Mommy, you wanted this, yes? We could leave right now and be happy.” Raven smiled to her mother. Her mother started to stuttered ,"Y-yes we could, let me pack our bags.” and quickly left the room, so Raven followed her mother and stopped when she noticed that her mother was actually dialing Nine-one-one on her, but before she could finish Raven said,” Mommy you said that we’re leaving, yes? Then why are you lying? Look what I did for you!” Raven gestured towards her father’s dead body. Tears started to stream down her face as the voice told Raven that her mother didn’t appreciate what she did.” Mommy, I thought I would never say this to you but, Nighty-night!”, Raven screamed with rage as she brought down her knife to her mother’s chest. Raven dropped to her knees and started to sob and cried, “Why mommy? Why did you lie to me?” Raven stroked her mother’s cheek” We could have been happy.”, Raven said in a shaken voice.

Raven left the house with her knife and fled to her friend’s house, and knocked on the door and her friend, Vanessa answered the door; she was surprised to see Raven this late. “Raven you’re coved in blood, what happened?” Raven looked down at her clothes and said,” My father kicked me out the house; my mom is calming things down, can I spend the night till every thing is settle?” Her friend looked at her for a while till she said sure. But later that night, Raven explained everything to her friend and came inside and asks if she wash her clothes in the bathroom sink. Raven watched the blood go down the drain as she remembered how her mother used to smile a lot before she married that bastard. Later that night, the voice told her she could stay this one night and she shouldn’t trust Vanessa. Raven listened for awhile but most of the time she ignored the voice, then she finally drifted off to sleep.

Next morning, Raven was in the living room when she heard a knock on the door. She got up from the couch and answers the door. Two police officers were standing there with handcuffs. Raven eyed the handcuffs then said,” Hello officers, May I help you?” The officers looked at each other then one of them asked Raven to follow them to a police car. Raven listened to voice telling her to run, so she took off trying to get to the back door but one of the officers tackled her and put handcuffs on her. Raven struggled to get away but they already escorted her to the car.

They immediately put her in jail till they put her in trial of killing five people in the last few days. Raven has been counting down how many days till they put her in court. Raven then heard the cell door open and saw her friend standing in the doorway. Raven gritted her teeth and said in an irritated voice,” About time, I have been in here for four days.” Raven was in front of the judge in an orange suit with handcuffs. The judge was looking at papers and every once and a while he would look at Raven. Raven would smile with glee every time he would look at her; the judge cleared his throat and said,” Miss Destiny, it says here that you murdered five people last week. Is that true?” He looked down at her with an uneasy look. Raven shrugged her shoulders then said,” Yeah sure.” Her lawyer stood up and said,” Your honor, she’s only fourteen years old, you’re not going to put her in prison, right?” Raven glared at her lawyer as she didn’t want to be talked down because of her age. Well she is trying to keep me out of prison or jail; it’s probably going to be a house arrest, Raven thought. The judge thought for a bit then asked the closest officer,” Sir, what time is it?” The officer glanced at this watch then said,” twenty to five, sir.” Raven was shaking thinking that she would be in jail or prison for twenty years without hearts and kidneys. The judge shrugged his shoulders and said,” instead of five to ten years of prison because to of that you are fourteen.” Raven gritted her teeth, and the judge stopped and gave her a stern look. Raven looked away and huffed. The judge continued on saying,” I’ll give you twenty months of house arrest and your supervisor is going to be your lawyer.” Raven was shocked by her punishment but smiled because the premises are going to be by her school and she thought of all the people in that area. Raven glanced at her lawyer to see that her lawyer was shocked as much as she was. The judge clapped his hands together and said,” well that’s it.” Raven’s lawyer opened her mouth to say something to the judge but she stopped and said,” well, be better get going then” Police officers took Raven’s handcuffs off and handed her clothes so she could change out off her orange suit. Raven was escorted to the car with an anklet on. Raven was putting her seatbelt on then her lawyer said,” well I’m responsible for you for twenty months so I’m going to formally introduce myself, I’m Ms. Caber ,but you can me Brasse.” Raven thought about how she going to sneak off but she heard brasse said,” Raven, you like Chinese food?” Raven sat there thinking a bit then said,” Yes Ms. Caber.” Brasse laughed then said,” please, you make me sound like an old woman, call me brasse.” Raven smiled a bit at this woman’s humor but she said,” Sure brasse.” Brasse nodded with approval and stepped on the gas pedal. Raven look at brasse questioning her age, but she looked really young. Raven decided to ask her a question,” brasse, how old are you?” Brasse looked at her and shrugged her shoulder and said,” twenty eight, what do I look older?” Raven laughed and said,” no, I knew you are young but I was just curious.” They arrived at the restaurant and went inside. They ordered to-go boxes and before they left brasse whispered in Raven’s ear saying,” I bought some sake; if you be good I’ll give you a glass.” Raven looked at brasse as she put her finger to her lips and make a shushing sound and winked. Wow, I just came out of jail for killing five people and she going to give me an alcoholic drink, is this woman crazy?, Raven thought ,but she smiled and nodded okay.

They drove for a while till brasse slowed down and said,” Well, we’re here.” She stopped in front of a very nice house. The house was painted charcoal, the window’s trimming was gray, and the door was black. Raven smiled at how the house looked. Brasse opened the door and went inside with the food, and Raven followed her looking at every wall with awe as she passed by them. Brasse sat down the food on a black table and said, “Let me show you your room, follow me.” Brasse made a gesture towards a door painted blood red, and Raven follows her and stood in the in front of the door. Brasse nodded encouragement to raven to open the door, so raven opened the door and saw the walls painted same color as outside and the bed in the middle has a deep purple covers and there was a chandelier that made shadows to make it seem like she was in a creepy forest. Brasse was behind her and said,” You like it?” She laughed nervously and looked at raven as if she were to say no. Raven smiled and said,” of course, this is awesome!” Brasse smiled at raven then said,” Oh, we better eat our food before it gets cold.” Raven followed Brasse to the table and sat with her. Raven and brasse laughed and joked around till Brasse got serious and said,” Raven, you killed five people. May I ask why?” Raven looked down and said,” those people, they disrespected me and their parents were in the way so I killed them.” Brasse took a sip of her sake and nodded and said,” but two of your victim’s were your parents.” Raven looked down at her glass of sake then look at Brasse with tears in her eyes saying,” My mother had to suffer with that bastard that always disrespected her, so I killed him, and my mother lied to me saying that we were going to leave and be happy but she was actually calling the police on me.” Raven started to breathe in a steady pace and she wiped her nose on a tissue. Brasse cleared her throat and said,” I’m glad you told me the truth.” Raven nodded to agree with her. Brasse got up from her seat and looked at raven with a smile on her face saying,” You need clothes. I think they took all your clothes from your house, but I can get you some more.” Raven stopped what she’s doing and ask,” why are doing this? I just came out of jail for killing five people. Does that concern you?” Brasse walked towards raven and placed her hand on raven’s leg and said,” I know you’re not a very bad person. I know that there’s good in you, and that you have a good future.” Raven looked at Brasse and said,” I can’t agree with you, but I’ll do my best,” Raven smiled and excused herself to her room. The voice was asking her if she was lying to Brasse, but she actually wasn’t. I like her, I won’t kill her, she’s cool, Raven thought.

A week later Raven was in school then she was called to the office. Raven walked towards the office but little did she know that the police was waiting for her. When she step foot in the office, they asked her to follow them to the police car. Raven had this feeling inside her that she was going to jail, but she wasn’t sacred at all; but instead of being scared, she felt glad of what she did. But instead of taking her to jail they took her to a mental institution nearby to talk to a psychiatrist about her loss. Raven smiled to herself because that they don’t know that she was the one that killed them.

Raven sat in a chair surrounded by books about everything about the human mind. Well not everything, she thought.

“Hello Miss Destiny, I heard about your loss, I’m very sorry”, a woman in a dress with a clipboard said. Raven gritted her teeth because that’s was her real name but everyone called her Raven, for that her hair was dark as a raven’s wing. “Would you mind telling your full name?”, The lady said. She paused for a moment then quickly said, “Oh my apologies, I’m Dr. Smith”

“Raven Smith” ,Raven said through clenched teeth as she was mocking the doctor.

“Your full name.”, Dr. Smith said in a stern voice.

Raven huffed and said,” Destiny Jeda Vidnas.”.

“Good, now we’re making progress, your birthday.”, The Doctor said in a pleased way.

“December the fifth two thousand”, Raven said in an irritated voice.

“When was the last time you saw your parents?” Dr. Smith said and looked at Raven with concern.

Raven looked down for a while thinking about when she killed her mother. That moment was the hardest thing she had to face. She thought about how much she loved her mother and she always try to look after her but after she lied she had to kill her.

“Miss Destiny?” Dr. Smith said without patience

“Huh? Oh, after my father started to yell at my mom, she told me to leave the house and I heard a bunch of arguing so I ran to a friend’s house and ask if I could spend the night.”, Raven lied.

“But your friend said that you where covered in blood.” Dr. Smith pointed out.

Raven cursed herself because she knew that the doctor was right “Yeah, my father was in rage so he grabbed a knife and stabbed my mother multiple times and I ran towards her and she was bleeding badly, so I attacked him.” Raven said quickly to fit her lie.

“You could’ve called the police, you know?” The Doctor also pointed out.

“I had so much anger that I lost control and I was upset that he killed my mom!” Raven shrieked, for that half of that explanation was true.

“Ok one more question, your father was missing his heart, you know why?” The doctor said with an uneasy look.

Raven looked down for a while to think she didn’t want to tell her that she ate it so instead she said,” I thought my father was a heartless  person so I took his heart and said, you don’t deserve this you bastard.”

The doctor looked at her for a while then said,” Well, that is all I need to hear. Thank you Miss Destiny.”

Two nurses came in with a straight jacket and they started put it on Raven but she said, “Wait, what’s going on?” The doctor turned around and said, “Oh, this is just nothing sweetie, we are going to put you in a room, you cannibal.” She said the last part with disgust. “How did you know?” Raven said though her clenched teeth. “Well why don’t you ask your friend” She made a gesture towards a shadow and her friend appeared. The voice screamed,” I knew we shouldn’t trusted her” Raven glared at her then said,” you traitor, I’m going to kill you.” The girl looked away. The nurses started to escort Raven to a room with white walls and there is only one door which had several locks. Raven sat in the room and waited; every once and a while the door would open and a nurse would bring in pills, and every time Raven took one she would feel light-headed but it was like food to her. She laughed knowing that one day she would kill that lady and the girl.

Three months later

Raven was still in a straight jacket and still in the room. But one day Raven didn’t know that girl was trying to help her escape. Raven was in the room waiting for the day to end but she heard an unusual click of the door, for that she learned to count time because there was no clock in the room. The door opened and the girl was standing there with Raven’s belongings. ”Hey, I know that you’re mad but I’m trying to help.” Raven glared at her for a while till she said,” fine, get me out of this thing.” The voice told her that they are going to kill her later. The girl led Raven out of the building, but behind them the sirens blared out,”#9785 has escaped; I repeat # 9785 has escaped.” Raven laughed as she knew she has a new name, #9785. “This is as far I can take you, good luck Raven”, Vanessa planted a kiss on Raven’s cheek but Raven just glared at her and ran towards the woods.

Later that day, Raven went to Vanessa’s house, but she didn’t know that the doctor was the girl’s mother. She knew that Vanessa always kept her window open when Raven runs away from her father, so Raven could always came inside, but this time the window was locked. You bitch, Raven thought. She walked around the house; to her surprise she found a window open. She opened the window and saw the doctor sleeping in bed. Ha! Now this is awesome, two kills in one night!, Raven thought. She went inside and said,” you know doctor, I hate it when I say’ I’m fine’ and you Doctors think I’m denying everything, but that’s the only problem I have, but this time I think I can solve it.” The doctor woke up immediately and she stared at Raven in horror as Raven smiled at her and again her eyes shrunk.” I do have one thing to tell you, Nighty- night!”, She said with rage and brought down her knife but the doctor was fast so Raven stabbed her shoulder instead. “Aw, I wanted you to die fast.” ,Raven made a pouty face, and then she smiled,” But oh well, this would be fun.” She jumped on the doctor and stabbed her multiple times but she was still alive, the doctor started to scream,” Run Vanessa!” Raven giggled and said,” it’s too late.” She stabbed the doctor the last time and Dr. Smith stopped moving and stared towards Vanessa’s room with horror in her eyes.” well that was fun.”, Raven said in sing-song voice. She walked towards her room and opened the door.” Vanessa?” ,Raven whispered. “Hey Raven, you’re not to suppose to be here.”, Vanessa said and looked at Raven with worry. ”Its ok, your mom is asleep.” Raven said and thought ,forever. Raven brought her knife above her head and said,” you betrayed me, so I’m here to return the favor, Nighty-night.” She brought the knife down but Vanessa dodged it and jumped on Raven screaming and clawing her but Raven has the advantage of having a knife so Raven slashed Vanessa in her arm. Vanessa fell backwards but she took Raven’s knife, and she jumped on her and swung the knife till she cut Raven’s right eye. Raven clutched her eye screaming,” You Bitch!” Raven plucked the knife away from her and stabbed her in her chest. Vanessa let out a scream and her head rolled back. Raven threw her head back and laughed till her sides hurt; she smiled then said,” now, that was fun, but it was a workout, I’m not going to eat tonight though.” She pulled the knife out of Vanessa’s chest and left the house.

Raven was whistling and walking down the street till is heard the sirens. Right on cue, Raven thought. She ran to the woods and found herself a stump to sit on. Her right eye started to bleed worse “Damn it.”, Raven started to curse herself but she wiped the blood off her face and clean it. Raven couldn’t see out of it. She sat there for a long time.” I wonder, everyone will know me but I want them to know me by a different name.”, Raven said in a pleasing tone ,so she sat there for a long time till she thought of a good name. ”I got it, Nightwing or night for short, I like it, it suits my hair color and my saying, nighty-night.”, Raven said. Raven continued to walk in the woods whistling.

"I better take care of my eye.”, Raven mumbled, so Raven grabbed her shirt and ripped it more and tried it around her eye. "That’s better.", She said in a calm voice. She walked for a while then she stopped thinking to herself that her eye going to continue bleeding till she takes care of it. She looked around to see a stone that's seems to fit perfectly in her eye socket. She grabbed the stone and craved a raven to symbolize her former name, Raven. 