Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34822941-20181104210712/@comment-35911608-20181105143847

Did the narrator also try "Slenderman" with their search? That is what this feels like to me.

Next point, the writing is just Telling me these events, I feel nothing when I read this. No shock, no fear, it's just a series of events. Some parts are also quite redundant:

''The film was completely true, and was a documentary film about a woman named Eve Carriet whose husband had died and shortly after her five year old child had died as well. She got a dog before her son has died, and the film was about her and her dog, and what they did together. The film was nice and very heartwarming, and I watched it once about every half a year after we got it.''

I won't even try discussing the monster because... it's Slenderman. It's Slenderman but it can change its face.

I'll just wrap this up with a continuity problem. If Eve murdered Cody because she saw the Sad Man, and the Sad Man is the ghost of Cody, how could the ghost inspire her to kill her son when he isn't dead yet?

I personally don't see this one working. But work on it, and bring it back if you want to try again.