Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26437574-20160527233511/@comment-24101790-20160527235815

This is well below quality standards. Besides being a wall of text, there's little to no punctuation here (in concluding sentences or in conjunctions), you don't properly capitalize words like "I", and there are a lot of grammatical issues (it's=it is, its=possession), run-on sentences, and awkward phrasing ("I understand its very hard to understand what do you mean you might be thinking before I tell you make sure that it is not possible that anyone could see whatever you're reading this with or you're at risk but what imtrying to say is what you saw is real what you feel is happening that shadow that you saw was real but don't pay any attention just ignore it").

As all this was mentioned in your previous thread, I won't be listing too many examples. Additionally the story is incredibly generic and the 'you're next'-style ending really doesn't pay off. Here's a link to the page of common tropes and cliches that are best avoided. I'm sorry, but I don't think this story can really be salvaged as the concept is pretty weak and your writing really doesn't help.