Talk:Nana825763/@comment-24082398-20150103003654

I'd have to agree with Karoler. The grammar was very good, I didn't catch any mistakes, and the story actually somewhat unnerved me. I think my main concern is that it wasn't a devil but it wasn't human, I mean, come on. That's overused a lot. The other thing that irked me was that it mystically tracked down the narrator and (Presumeably?) killed him. Aside from those minor pet peeves, I'd say this was a decent story overall. 7.5/10.