Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25217349-20140723205724/@comment-25148755-20140723234224

I actually had the same thought as umbrello wrt the killer being supernatural. I agree with the comments about the language, no need to break the fourth wall. I actually didn't mind the swearing...it's an adult recalling childhood memories and adults are more likely to swear so that's fit to me. I didn't like the ending. Abrupt and ambiguous is fine, but if the killer is a woman wearing someone else's skin, it makes even less sense that the narrator is in the (living) position to write this account (especially in the past tense as it is) If it were a supernatural entity that disappeared that'd be a little more believable, but honestly the narrator doesn't seem amped up enough considering the experience she just had. That being said, not a bad read! I'd give it 6.5/10 as is.