Talk:Merlina's Full House/@comment-5733573-20181007142919

It's okay, but really lacks focus. I'm not sure why Merlina is the main character here when it's clearly Myrna's story and would make more sense if you told it completely from her perspective. It also goes on way too long. It should really end when Myrna discovers what's going on. In addition, there are some walls of text that really  need to be broken up. You also keep saying "housemate" when I'm pretty sure it should be "housemaid."

Overall, not terrible, but it does have some issues.