Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24881951-20140701233056/@comment-24918243-20140702203149

Sykokillah wrote: This is really good. The only problem is that this is in second person (you) and I hate it when stories are in second perspective. Maybe you could change it to I? The ending, while it doesn't have anything scary, is quite good in itself. You could add something paranormal, if you want. Other than that this is really good. Yeah, I hate that too.

Also the story is just about you (or me, in that case) seeing something that scared me on the internet. There is nothing really unusual or supernatural happening here. To me is seems unfinished. If not unfinished then nothing really out of the ordinary happening here.