Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24966121-20140521133858

Hello, I am frankly new to this and I am enjoying the stories i read here. I decided to give it a little try myself, I already (accidently) posted it before as a completed pasta, and probably deserved, it got deleted. But without any feedback or something so, here goes! Feedback will be appreciated :)

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I did not have the nerves to tell this earlier, but to put my mind at ease, I will tell you my story.

A few years ago, when I was at the age of 13, my niece, Annette (who was a year older than me) had become the victim of an accident by having an unlucky fall from the stairs and died by breaking her neck. I was at school camp during the funeral and couldn't visit it. We had known each other well, and I was very sad.

When I became 14 my aunt visited my birthday and she gave me a PSP. I was quite surprised with such an expensive gift but she told me that her son, Reinier (so my nephew) already had one and she knew I liked games. It had belonged to my niece before.

When my family left I helped my mother cleaning around. When we were finished she and my father would bring my grandmother to her home who had been visiting my birthday but had arrived by taxi, it was a pretty long drive. I did not want to be in the car for so long so I stayed home.

When they left i curiously looked around my gifts and took the PSP out. Too bad I had no games....But wait, there was a game in the PSP already. It was called Castlevania: The Dracula X Chronicles.

I had played a Castlevania game on the game boy before so I knew the series and went to play.I watched the cool starting scene of the game and started the game. I could pick some different options and I went for 'new game'.

Now if you do not understand things I am gonna say about the game itself I suggest you look them up, else it might get confusing.

When i pressed new game I saw there was file already which was called 'Chris'. I deleted it because I wanted a fresh game and was not sure how the safe progress worked....I thought i would need the other safe slots as well.

Now there were no saved games so I went to make a new one. Ricardo is my name but i often call myself RIKI in games, so thats what I did. The game started with a little movie and i had to attack some things, nothing special and very basic. It was the prologue.

Shortly after that the game carried on and i came at stage one. (all stages had the name Stage X, with a title or something underneath it) I did not pay much attention at it then though. A little bit further in the first level a cutscene came up. A woman was running and got captured by some evil priest who served dracula (the final boss i presumed). The woman captured was called....Annette. I was freaked out and tears appeared in my eyes. I thought my mind was toying with me so I went to look this up on the internet....Well, the character was really called Annette, what a coincidence.....

Ah well, i played the game further, I saved a girl named Maria in the second stage (which became an playable character) but I kept playing with Richter (the main character).

At stage 3 the text appeared again *stage 3: Bloody tears*. While all of the levels had quite some good music, this one was beautiful in my ears, if you do not know it, i suggest you go to youtube and listen to it (search for the dracula x chronicles version). Oddly enough this music sounded very familiar as well. Did i heard it in another Castlevania before? I did not know and just kept playing.

The game is tough and unforgiving, but I am quite good at platformers and I came pretty far.

At stage 7 something like this text appeared as level text: 'Moon Finale' the boss of the level was Annette who was turned in a vampire, she commanded an army of bats which attacked the character, She had some lines like 'Protect me' when the bats defended her and 'You will join me'! when she attacked. Upon being defeated she would scream 'Richteeeer.....' (the character name) and vanish. I could not help myself getting some tears in my eyes again, stupid name coincidence....

Ah well, Stage 8, the final stage. What a short game! Was what I thought. I walked up the stairs and found an invisible staircase, awesome! a hidden room. I found some goodies and looked for more rooms, nope, nothing, and i went back to the last room. I entered the boss room and some conversation started. Nothing to special, Dracula taunted Richter. It went something like this:

Dracula: Belmont, son of Belmont, I have been waiting for you.

Richter Belmont: Dracula! Die now and leave this world, you will never belong here!

Dracula: Oh, but they invited me.

Richter: You are nothing but a blight on mankind!

Dracula: Ha, mankind, hatred and lies, fight me, and die for their sins!

Then the fight started, I failed quite some times but eventually I won, a cutscene, and upon the final strike the ghost of one of the bosses i had slain earlier appeared, escaping with dracula.

The credits appeared, and after the credits a screen popped up. It said something like:

Find the ghost of shaft (the boss earlier defeated) to kill dracula, try to find secrets!

I clicked continue and beneath that text the following appeared in bloody letters.

'And who knows what else you will discover......'

Awesome! The game is not over yet. I was showed the starting screen of the game again and decided to continue my journey. My safe file was there but to my despice it was called Chris again. Oh well, I would continue. I opened my file and was shown 'stage select'. Where to start my search? I had seen some weird walls in stage 7, so I decided to start my journey there.

Stage 7: My Secret....

Hey, It did not say that before, it was moon finale! I must be on the right track for this secret boss!....What creeped me is that i heared the beatiful Bloody Tears theme again which belonged to stage 3....but much slower and more tragic.

I continued, the suspicious wall i managed could not be broken sadly and in the end of the stage I came at the boss again. However this time it was strange. I faced Annette as a vampire again, but she would only sit on the ground and not move or attack. I could hit her without getting hit myself. The only lines she kept shouting sometimes were 'Protect me' now and then, but in a very sad way....When i defeated here she yelled heartbroken: Reinieeeeer.......

I could not breath for a moment.....That was my nephews name....my mind must be toying with me....Upon entering stage 8 i left the stage, and tried to play stage 7 again. Everything I did was repeated and I was scared, very scared.

Searching for something to distract my mind i just kept playing, now i was in stage 8. Wondering that i might have triggered something for the final boss I went for Dracula again. First i visited the hidden treasure room again and then went for the fight. Gladly, nothing special happened and I defeated him, Same cut scene, Same credits, Same 'secret' message.

The boss fight had taken some minutes and I was a bit calmer now. I decided to search for the secrets again, but when I went for my game file again I was shocked.

There was my game file named Chris, but below that there was a file called 'Play' and below that 'Maria'.

Play

Maria

The other character? is that the secret? Well of course! I've been an idiot! I chose Maria as character and her Stage select location was already above the final stage.

Stage 8: My secret....revealed...

I went upstairs, visited the hidden room but when i wanted to go back again i walked up another invisible stairs, odd. I did not find this hidden room before!

I came upstairs, in the second hidden room. There was blood on the floor, and the dead corpse of Annette....how odd...I followed the room to the right and with blood this text was written: Christopher killed me.....

Christopher? who was that? The corpse of Annette came crawling in my screen from the left sighing: you will join me....

I did not hesitate a second and turned my PSP off. What was that? I had never felt so scared in my life, and I was home alone, Never had i felt so miserable. I wanted to tell my aunt this disturbing thing, but would she believe me? at least I could talk to someone.....

I went to their house with my bike, It was a 10 minute cycle, I rang the doorbell. My nephew Reinier opened the door. My aunt was not at home. I told him the story, But he did not believe much of it. He said we would look on the internet for the secret together and so we did. However there was no secret room after the second....And after defeating dracula there should have never appeared bloody letters....

I asked him who Chris was, because of the profile name. I hated myself for not bringing the PSP. Chris? he asked? You mean Christopher? It is my real father he said, he and his mum have been divorced for years now, he sometimes visited him with Annette in the past, But Reinier did not like Christopher so in the end only Annette went to visit him sometimes.

We talked about some other things and then he asked me to leave. When he left me out i searched my pockets for my keys for my bike. Trough the window I saw my nephew sitting behind the piano, I listened to what he was going to play, after a few seconds I heard it.....Bloody Tears....

I did not know what to think, It scared me a bit but I did not want to look like an idiot by ringing the door again, so I left home. My parents had not arrived yet and after the short cycle I did some more research on the internet. After finding nothing strange about the game I had to laugh a bit about myself. It is some kind of a horror game after all, It must have been me.

I started the game again but instead of the normal title screen I would see the corpse of Annette again.

I quickly clicked load game because this had been unexpected. There was the Chris file again, but on the left and right side of his name......Two crosses...Like you would find on a cemetery...

I put the game off again, I couldn't stand this creepy stuff.

My parents arrived at home, I did not speak a word about it with them....

The next day I went to my aunt, she told me about Christopher, that there have been suspicions of him beating up Annette sometimes. I thought I knew the truth, but could not speak for it....

Later that week my aunt called my mother. It was a long talk and my mother looked shocked.

I asked what was wrong. My mother said that Christopher, the ex husband of my aunt had killed himself a few days ago. Along with his body there was also proof found that he had killed Annette instead of an accident that happened. I was shocked....Later that night I couldn't stand it anymore and started up the PSP again, had my niece been communicating with me the whole time?

The starting screen seemed normal, and so did the menu. Upon game select the name 'Chris' was gone. Now it said:

Riki

Will

Join-me

I quickly tapped the PSP switch over which results in it going on stand-by. Scared to the bone I had no idea what to do. Who would believe me? I threw the PSP in my trash can and went to bed. From my trash can I could hear a soft sound coming....A soft melody of Bloody tears.... 