Talk:The Experience I Had in Girl Scouts/@comment-5733573-20180727145248/@comment-35711173-20180727193435

Hi,

I see a lot of fundamental skill. There are a lot of things you did right with the story, but nobody discusses that.

I know of pokemon as a cultural reference but that is all. I would have no idea why a small child's card game could cause a disappearance. If you want to reach a wider audience than the pokemon players (us white haired and thick glasses people) then we need enough to make the connection.

If Jdeschene says so, listen VERY carefully. Nobody is always right in their reviews but she comes close.

Doctor Bob Smith, MD, Specializing in Proctology. (talk) 19:34, July 27, 2018 (UTC)