Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20141003215640/@comment-25226524-20141010233403

This is great. You did a great job of showing the disturbed nature of the narrator before the confirming reveal. The descriptive and metaphorical work was great, as usual. The closing scene was exceptionally well done and creative. This one sentence I thought would read better with a couple commas: What we see after some age tarnishes our psyches is not at all as accurate and unbiased as it once was.

I really don't see anything that needs to be improved. I hope my reviews aren't becoming redundant, but your writing has risen to the point where I'm finding it hard to be critical. Keep up the good work.