Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37708694-20181205182102/@comment-35711173-20181206154503

Ouitalkcreepy,

I see a definite improvement. The protagonist has gone from unbelievable to high end believable.

When you list a technology that we don't have and we aren't close to having, you implicitly say that the story is in the future. As Bloody Spaghetti said, we are very far from a single unified cure for cancer, decades at least. Then this story takes place a couple of decades after that. Add it up, and we are at close to the end of this century, in the realm of futuristic science fiction. At that point, anything is possible. They may be holding these little meetings in a private space station or on the moon. They may be legal - on that moon colony. Are you trying to write such a piece? If so, you need to paint that world clearly.

If you want to put the story in this decade, you need to change the detail of how the protagonist's parents made their fortune.

Dr. Bob