Talk:The Mangrove Mirror/@comment-29432816-20160804141323

I really loved this story, your writing style reminds me of HP Lovecraft in some ways, though I do agree the ending is a little disappointing. It perhaps needs the truth bending slightly, and something supernatural to happen, like a figure to appear in the picture, or behind you in the mirror perhaps, and that's what makes you faint. If  Lovecraft wrote this for example it would end with the narrator in a mental hospital as whatever he saw drove him insane. You don't need to go that far, it could still just end with you leaving the flat and staying somewhere else. Like others have said, you build tension really well, then nothing seems to happen really. It needs something more dramatic to happen when you discover the mirror on the back of the painting.

Or the fact the picture is changed when you get back, then the red paint and dead flowers on the outside of the building suggests maybe there was some kind of black magic going on? Perhaps introduce a creepy landlord character who you fear has cast some kind of spell over you? All just suggestions, don't change your writing style, but it needs something a little more dramatic at the end to make it a really good horror story.