Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26278367-20150420020923/@comment-25037895-20150420021929

At first glance, I noticed a few things:
 * (1) Punctuation goes inside quotations; periods, commas, exclamation points, etc.
 * (2) When ever the speaker in the story changes, start a new paragraph.
 * (3) The paragraphs are quite lengthy, and readers may get lost while reading. Try to keep paragraphs around four or five sentences.
 * (4) Dismal grammar and punctuation; there are websites that can help you with these.