Talk:Rumpelstiltskin/@comment-5632489-20150305231142

This was admittedly incredibly hard for me to get through because of the child's involvement as established from the first paragraph ("He knew a child porn and snuff film syndicate in Tijuana that would give him fifty grand for a baby like that.") I have an extreme phobia of seeing the harm of children in any way, and I'm actually trembling a bit even as I write this. So in making me feel unsettled you have certainly accomplished.

I liked Rosemary a bit, but I felt more sorry for her than anything else. I was falsely hoping that she would come to some sort of salvation and escape by the end, but I knew that was wishful thinking since you kind of know from the start this is not going to end well. So for being able to make me uncomfortable this story is perfect.

But is it good? Well, of course your writing is, as you've proven time and time again, but it didn't really feel like it went anywhere. I think you did a good job showing urban decay through just your characters' bleak situations alone, but I wish that there was a bit more development for Rosemary to make it even more impactful when her child is stolen. It really just felt all despairingly bleak, which of course is good, but it's a little worrisome if there's not even the single most minuscule tension breaker here or there.

Sorry if this review isn't that good, I've been struggling with personal issues lately so my Burnt-Out-O'-Meter is high. But I hope some of this still helps.