Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36960218-20191031183009/@comment-9041013-20191102001256

Well this could work in some layers of the wikia. And it follows the Halloween spirit so I guess it's fine.

Needs a bunch of technical polishing first.

Then adjust the plot a little, get rid of the supernatural ending, it doesn't do anything for the story if anything it ruins it. Although rare there have been cases of people trying to ruin the lives of many through covert substance distribution to unsuspecting innocents. Make the woman a kid hater who just has a reason to hate kids and everyone knows this so the narrator is warned off about her but doesn't listen. So she ends up giving him a laced candy to teach "everyone" a lesson at the narrator's expanse.

Also, why the drug hasn't worked, make it so that he over ate candies and got food poisoning, thus making him vomit and fitting for a hospital trip where they find out the candy was drug laced.

Nice little morality tale there.