Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31294034-20170215180000/@comment-7064562-20170218210503

 Well besides the many, many grammar, sentence structure, and unneeded words issue that’s all over this, there are a few more problems.

However, even if you do that, its still rather dull as a whole and overused.
 * 1)  You use a lot of, irregular words, that, while not that large or complex, throw off the overall feel of the story due to your inexperience and style of story. This will be fixed the more you write so it's not much a problem you need to focus to hard on
 * 1)  The story itself is as boring as sitting down for a meal of corn and overcooked turkey with your 97 year old grandmother. Not only is it beyond cliche and has been used time and time again when people hear scratching and they go to check on it, but nothing happens. Oh, she sees a shadowy thing, so what? Doesn’t hook you or make you scared or scream omg. We’ve had 1000’s of stories just like this, but they normally add something. If you’re so keen on the suncurtions, hint about them at the start of the story,and throw the reader for a loop by actually having it be coming from in the closet or under the bed after she finally finds out it was from the curtains. That way the reader things its behind the curtains the whole time and is surprised. That’s jsut an example because right now your story is just a 1000 word version of  “I was reading a book then I heard scratching, so I checked it out and these curtains that were never talked about before and i thought I saw someone, the end.” Random things like that are not clever, there kind of lazy and prevent actual build up to a story. It’s like saying, “I killed 9000 people but then I it turns out It was actually a dolphin and this wasn’t hinted at or told in any matter.” Amazing plot twist? Yes, but people will just roll their eyes and question, well how was I supposed to know that? In other words, you have to set a chain of events or hints that make the reader go “OH I GET IT NOW” once you deliver your twist or climax into the story.
 * 1)  IF the sun is in her eyes, she should just use sunglasses
 * 2)  The guy who wrote before me is being stupid. The "It' doesn't really matter when refering to an animal, however if you use things like "Him" or "Her" it will show how close the person is to said animal. However most people don't care as it's unimporant to the overall story and won't even notice. Cats are not people after all. The scratching part also makes since because its how the person or creature(As it's clear from the story that you want to leave that vauge) is trying to creepy her out or get her attetion so it's not an issue at all. The only thing that agreed on is it needs more flare, persay.