Talk:Personality Molding/@comment-35711173-20180704181313

Hi,

You said "We've all played a Pokémon game at least once in our life. We've all seen how a yellow creature, looking like some sort of overgrown mouse with a thunderbolt as a tail, journeyed alongside a ten year old boy."

But I have never played Pokémon and I actually have no interest in doing so. I suggest looking at that first sentence and seeing how to re-write it to make people who don't know what Pokémon is or have no interest in it be interested in your story.

DrBobSmith (talk) 18:13, July 4, 2018 (UTC)