Talk:Sister's Computer/@comment-5733573-20180915161240/@comment-7602529-20180926173717

Actually, you said nothing about the end. You said, "but it needs something more at the beginning.  This really needs another clue to make it feel complete." and gave an example about the beginning.

You said nothing about the end.

The end is its own thing. It just needed to be more explained more. The bloody clothes caught me off guard because I didn't know what happened. As I said, I thought he found her sister. The end could had been explained more or just written entirely different without leaving us in question and off guard. The last sentence was just out of nowhere basically. Quite unexpected. Thus, this is why me and L0cked334 gave examples (I referenced and agreed to L0ck but still.)