Talk:A Leak in the Ceiling/@comment-5306249-20200221033454

This story’s strongest points are definitely its apt description of the loss of senses and the oppressive environment which hastens the protagonist’s fate. I felt sufficiently claustrophobic and uneasy the entire time, and the unreliability of the ‘narrator’ added to that unease.

While the progression and unreliability play into the repetition of prose, on a personal level I did not feel the impact of the slow burn as much as I theoretically should have: it is more ‘passive’, relying on setting and premise, rather than ‘active’, where things continually happen. That being said, this is still one of the stronger-creepier entries so far.

Style: 4/5 Horror: 5/5 Entertainment: 3/5 Theme: 5/5

Total: 17/20