Talk:Ten Letters/@comment-31077845-20170228134934

I had figured something like that might happen; the overall structure rang of familiarity, but not so much I'd call it unoriginal or anything. I suppose I'm a bit confused as to how they would've gotten rid of a kid to keep another alive. She clearly still has a weak heart, so it's nothing crazy like a heart transplant, not to mention they don't take hearts from living people...I'm just not sure what getting "rid of [him]" could possibly mean. I thought maybe this was her brother or something and her parents didn't have enough money to pay for both of their care, but he clearly indicates they have different parents, and unless they were in some ramshackle hospital in the poorer parts of Africa there would be no reason for the hospital to have so little resources they had to choose who lived and died.

Oh, and I'm going to make 2 minor edits: 2 times the word "phase" is used where I'm almost positive the author meant "pace", as "phase" doesn't really make sense in either case. And I'm not going to do anything about this one as I think it might just be an indication of improper word choice, but in the same paragraph as one of those instances it says she "hovered" in fear when she realized all the phones were gone? I was thinking maybe that was supposed to be "cowered", but that would be a bit little odd as far as word choice goes too, so like I said I'm going to just leave that. I'm also not sure about applying the category "weird" to this; stories like dogscape (freakin' dogscape man...) are "weird", this wasn't much weirder than any story, but weird is a subjective term so eh.