Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5299148-20140407165309/@comment-24841494-20140408185629

The last few paragraphs escalate very quickly. He finds the dead dude, gets out, goes home, kills himself. the end, all within the last 6 paragraphs. Go into more detail about the last three days. Sure, seeing a dead dude is traumatizing, and I saw you were hinting that it followed him or that he was paranoid, but that is hardly grounds for suicide. Overall, expand the ending and explain why he killed himself.