Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-17758905-20150312032243/@comment-24976741-20150313003622

Hey I like hypothetical experiments to, if we're lucky we might be able to guess and prepare for any of the worst possible outcomes like Urahara. So, let's play a hypothetical game, imagine as I am a possible king who loves humans, of course in general (search up Izaya Orihara for an example.) Shall we begin?

I simply love your idea, I find it fasinating to get a little peek inside the mind of another human being, it's intriuging. Of course, it's not like no one else has done it before, but not many that I've seen. That's why you constantly need to keep evolving both yourself and your topic, amaze me if you please. It dosen't matter whether your topic is original or not so long as you are able to put your own unique spin on it.

Hypothetical events are close to second on the creepy factor to something that can actually happen to you (Ex: kidnapping). So already you are off to a good start. Your story however is only food for thought, not too much creepy potential has been shown so far. If you may, add examples such as horrendous events that have happened througout history (Ex: Bloody Sunday, Halocaust, destruction of the Twin Tower).

You are the holder off the cards, you may choose our fate with however much anguish you desire, just as long as it puts a smile on our twisted minded faces and makes those who fear cower for their lives. I would like to point that you express more of a scientifical term rather than someone trying to creep us out, you'll need to try a different approach with your wording.

As you posed, life isn't actually a complex game, it is the players that participate that make it so complex. I would like to also suggest that if you find it fitting, to maybe leave the story on an end note such as, "But maybe the creators are secretly creating a being that may one day destory us. They are the creators of course, their only job is to make the puppets for their play, what happens after, is none of their concern."

But enough of ideas for now, you have your own head to think with. Now then, I will await for the tree to bear it's apple, so that I may pick it for my own enjoyment.