Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180723072936/@comment-35711173-20180723082552

It's short and easy to read. There are some problems with the prose but I see a lot worse all the time here in Writer's Workshop. Your pacing is good.

You kind of know what's going to happen pretty early but that's hard to avoid with a piece that's what, 350 or 400 words?

I feel creepiness at the end but not horror. Horror is one of the two parts that I feel makes a creepypasta - the other being creepiness. Something inside there eats people - we don't see it, we don't experience the munching, etc. OK.

I give it a B grade. I know it can be improved with some tightening and some material to