Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29015383-20160712171950/@comment-28420405-20160714203349

Your updated ending did add some more context. I can't help but want a little more, but I think that's just my opinion. Honestly, you added enough to tie the two together so it's not as "random" a twist, but maybe an extra descriptor or another quip about using the internet as a "hunting" ground (without using that word because it's a bit clichéd I suppose) might help. Again, that's just me because I'm not super into vampires, so maybe I just need more to grasp it.

I'm excited to read more of your work. Great job on this nice little piece!