Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24352864-20140322191756/@comment-5825217-20140325020027

Title could be something like Guilt.

I immediately noticed that the story switches between past and present tense a few times - fix that. Also, there are some places where a comma would be helpful.

In the first few paragraphs, you don't need to include (Not X's real name) - nobody knows if its real or not anyway, and if it is, just put a little disclaimer at the top stating those names are fake.

The story itself is good, it could just use some fixing of awkwardly written bits and some grammar fixes. I'm not sure what "after his wake" means in the last paragraph, though. The only way I could fully point out everything (I'm not trying to make you feel bad; I'm just notoriously uptight about this sort of thing) would be to rewrite the story, if you wanted me to. (I know I sound cocky, but you don't even have to credit me, I do it because I like writing.)