Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24965033-20141025012011/@comment-25585263-20141027022710

You're almost there.

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" Just as the father is about to leave the boy's room, the boy asks the father. "Daddy, mommy came in, and kissed me goodnight" "

Telling his dad that mommy came in and kissed him goodnight is not asking a question.

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Destroy, another tip if you want to write better is, to read more, that way you can get a better feel on how stories are wrote.

Stephen King once said "if you don't have time to read, you don't have time to write."

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Here's some better music for you to listen to for writing creepy storys:

https://www.youtube.com/user/myuuji

Anyway, you're on the right track, this was a step-up imo.

