Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26581361-20150707024159/@comment-24101790-20150707025043

It was deleted within two minutes of posting due to the formatting issue that make the last section hard to read. (Resolved) The quality standards issue like capitalization ("It knows it is powerful. it (It) knows it is alpha. it (It) knows it is omega.", "shadows? something lurking behind...", etc. "Not At Night.", "It Creeps"

Punctuation issues: Apostrophes incorrectly added to plural words "Human's have" Words hyphenated that do not need to be hyphenated. "help-less"

Wording issues: you have multiple fragmented sentences "The beginning.", "The end . . .", etc.

Story issues: there is little story here and most of it is extremely vague. The talk of contradictions with no explanation only makes it more problematic: "it knows it is alpha. it knows it is omega." This story comes off more as an introduction rather than a story.