Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26070273-20150203041013

hey, so i plan on chaning the ending for sure, but i would like peoples opinions, critiques, concerns, etc.

Do you know that feeling, when you get up in the middle of the night to go to the restroom, and you don't turn on the lights. So you try to make your way through your house to get to it. But it's okay there's a little bit of light coming through the windows in the living room, but then you get to the hallway. The hallway just goes off into darkness. And the darkness brings a creeping, nagging feeling. You become paranoid. Wait, what was that, something move? No, it must just be your imagination, its probably just the vents turning on.

You get to the bathroom door, it's mostly closed. As you open it you get that nagging feeling again, that you're being watched. You try to scan the room with your eyes wide as you can open them to see if you can find any source of movement. You see no movement, but you still can't shake the feeling that somebody's watching you. You tentatively wrap your arm around us at the door frame to grope at the light switches. Your heart is beating fast, and finally you flip the switch on. There's nothing there, no monster, no apparition or anything of the sort.

You go in and close the door and go about your business, you wash your hands and right as you open the door, fear clutches you, you forgot that it was so dark in the hallway. You peek your head around the corners, to see if there's anything moving. There isn't. You quickly make your way back to your room. And you go back to sleep, but it was a rather uneasy sleep, tossing and turning. I would know, since I was watching you from the ceiling the whole time. 