Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25558572-20140709014159/@comment-25155143-20140709023353

It sure was...disturbing.

It's very well written, as well. I only found this little oversight:

" Soon even [the floor underneath her vanished], and her racing heart slowed down. [Even the hard floor underneath her seemed to disappear] into the silent haze of defeated agony."

Your story is interesting, and it kept me reading until the end. The only thing, though, is that it may be a bit predictable. I knew beforehand that the centipede would leave an egg even before it was removed.

You're very good at descriptions, congratulations! It really disgusted me...In a good sense (for you).