Talk:Occupied Chimney/@comment-28266772-20161228112837

I thought this was an awesome little story. I loved the use of the Jersey Devil and I loved its pairing here. I remember reading reports of hoofprints on snowy rooves related to this particular cryptid and it was a fantastic idea to merge that legend with your prompt. There were parts of this I quite liked such as the little touches of characterisaton (such as the clothes, and the megabloks/lego tragedy.) But like Johnathan pointed out there were occasionally awkward bits of wording, (there's one section where you pair mismatched and mishmashed and it stands out as odd).

But yeah, overall, awesome story.