Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180418033207/@comment-9041013-20180418052305

The end is nigh, the end is nigh.

Race v Race puns definitely means that the end is nigh since there is already a song called "Human Race" that does the same thing, with less "end of the world" themata, just race v race puns.

The rhythm here isn't the best, but oh well, It still kind of rolls on the tongue but this does need some work done on it. I'm half asleep so, perhaps, possibly, maybe, I'm just not in my right mind... that I do not know, senor.

Now, as for the content, I like this, but you have so much bias in here, or well, I guess it's part of your actual message... Again, I'm not a mind reader so I don't really know. Anyways, humans aren't the center of humanity, so that's not the end of the world, it's just the end of hoomans. We love to think of ourselves as the center of the universe, though, don't we? Hubris is a terrible thing that leads to a terrible fate. Acidic rains would work, to make sure we either disappear or lay low but they aren't exactly mother nature's tools, if they were to occur on a massive scale on earth it's a result of polution and the rains just being so toxic from our deposits that they've gone acidic. We are not on Venus, I repeat, we are not on Venus. Also, what happened to all the sperm banks? how fucking acidic is that rain?

Also, I've once watched this show that looks at how nature could possibly look like millions of years into the future, according tot his show, the future "primates" are actually Cephalopods of various sizes, shapes and form that roam the earth, so you could make a followup poem with a bunch of squid themed remarks?

Again, sorry if this sounds very eccentric, but I'm half asleep and not in my right mind right now. You did good, it needs some technical work, but overall, this does not disappoint.