Talk:NES Godzilla Creepypasta/Chapter 1: Earth & Mars

Note: As of now, I will be attempting to review this entire pasta, chapter-by-chapter. I will not use my normal format, however, and just give a general overview of my view on the pasta thus far, since I can't rate chapters like real pastas. If I did, this would make such a horrible pasta. And so I begin:

Chapter 1 of this "famed" video game pasta (written by Cosbydaf, who also wrote the excellent Normal Porn For Normal People) acts like a hook, drawing you into the pasta, giving off little bits of information to act as foreshadowing. What surprises me about Chapter 1 is that it shies away from video game cliches- characters being violent, the game being violent, violent stuff in the game being violent- and instead chooses to just use the engine of the game (no hyper-realism here! Yay!) to generate the creepiness of this Creepypasta.

However, I have some issues with the pasta- the foreshadowing in the first chapter utilizes symbols and meaningless phrases/glitches to give the reader a glimpse into what is about to happen in later chapters. Usually, this leads to main characters spewing out blood, the game spewing out blood- it's a perfect breeding ground for cliches, and I cannot possibly continue through the pasta with a "clean" mind. I know that some main character's going to die, and it's going to be connected to real life. Cliche, cliche, cliche.

Overall, as a hook starting off this pasta, it serves its purpose, and it serves it well. The writing is good, and I easily could scroll through the pasta without bumping into any "dead ends". The plot, even though maybe having some cliches later, can pleasantly surprise me by not having any.

You're tearing me apart, Lisa! 10:41, May 6, 2013 (UTC)