Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34541920-20180228234724/@comment-25926760-20180301033455

Couple quick tid bits I can offer from reading arguably almost every damn ritual pasta posted. (I'm a fan, and I'm not embarassed to say I've tried at least some of them). Also, as a devout follower of the Celtic and Norse pantheons, this strikes a bit close to home.

Renaming it a bit can help clarify. If you're only contacting Loki, reference it in the title.

Why cut the knees? Explaining this will help clarify it for the reader and flesh out the story a bit more.

Think about condensing the "it will be like they are frozen in time. Actually, time is frozen." It'll read better without the redundancy.

Double check the language you're using. Remember where Loki is from. You're looking at Scandinavia. (Norway, Finlad, Sweden) And think about the language itself. Loki's a lot older than modern day Scandinvia. Look into Elder Fuuthark and how those are pronounced.

How do you lose? This isn't really explained, and with apocalypse (well Ragnarok may be more fitting) in the balance, explaining this may help the reader understand how to not piss off the tricky Aesir.

The wine is a good touch, but remember all gods have their preferences. Using the correct one can turn an average summoning to a great one.

The way it's written is confusing. Is the religious symbol or your friend where Loki is? And any religious symbol? Can I use the Valknut? (Odin's primary) Hecate's Wheel? (Celtic) Crucifix? (Loki's older than Christianity)

Capitalization is key. The way the word god is capitalized each time leads one to believe there's only one. Not debating theology, but if you're aiming to summon a deity of a polytheistic belief, it goes without saying that you need to include them all. The only time the word god should be capitalized is if you're referencing monotheism (your Abrahamic faiths, Zoroastrianism, the religion of Aten, etc.)

Try not to specify a kitchen knife, as when dealing with gods in any ritual setting, symbology is ''everything. ''Think more a dagger if you need symbology. If it's just for the wound, be vague with it.

Some medical info, Aspirin is relatively ineffective against migraines. Try Excedrin if you're not against using brand names. Caffeine tablets or ibuprofen if you are. If it's not a migraine, specify. Migraines are vastly different from headaches. Speaking from experience here.

If Loki isn't granting a wish (wishing for knowledge and getting it through questions and answers doesn't count), think about changing the closing line. It ends it in a slightly confusing way.

As formatting is a big thing in this wiki, take a look at the way your paragraphs are structured. Remember what your English teachers said. Transitions make or break a paper. That might have just been mine though, she was a bit strange.

Think about calling your friend the vessel or conduit, not the body, of Loki. Saying he or she is the body implies the Aesir's permanence.

What's the price that's specified? If it's the wine, blood and gambling with armageddon, ignore this part of my comment.

Also, if the worst your friend is getting is a couple cut knees, try wound instead of damage. Nit picky? Yes. But damage implies the mortality of the wound, dismemberment or at the very least a missing chunk.

That about wraps it up for my part. Sorry about the length. Also! Side note. You add signatures to posts using four tildes (~) in a row. (Look above your "TAB" key on the left hand side of your keyboard.) You can change what your signature says in your account settings and when you do it that way, it links back to your personal page. Like so: Burn a body in a creamatorium, its your job. Burn a body at home, it turns into &#34;evidence&#34;. (talk) 03:34, March 1, 2018 (UTC)