Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20161130072138/@comment-25226524-20161205000033

Let's see what some others have to say about this. I can't get past certain issues, and I'd like to hear thoughts from another user or two. Something about it doesn't work for me, but I'll keep an open mind. It seems odd to me that he's talking about them the way he is when he knows they're fictional characters. Something about that feels off. There are some other issues like "never have I ever" needs the word "ever" removed from it. Maybe try to get some more feedback and come back to this one. The concept is more of an issue than the writing at this point.