Talk:The White Spider/@comment-9041013-20151218201157

It's a good story however I did not like your styling... and it's kind of hard to understand who's saying what and who's who.

You should've refrained from using the first two sentences as they ruin stories, for the most part, not yours however.

I really liked how the heroine has made up her dead twin in her mind, forced to forget her (cause it's unhealthy to imagine your dead relatives, obviously), gets reminded of her and then goes on to avenge her forced amnesia

Good job

7.5/10