Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32807959-20181213134809/@comment-9041013-20181214010302

This is just all over the place.

It makes no sense at all, as if it were written by some hopeful child hoping to scare people with a story. It's just not working in any way, shape or form. Why things are happening so conviniently late in Johnny's life? Why the grandparents take action before dying? Why do they come back from the dead? Why does Johnny become a psychopath all of the sudden? Sure a little enjoyment from the suffering of his tormentors is possible, but there should be a red line where he goes "but that was way too fucked up". Why does he indulge in cannibalism?

Also, if the grandparents were dead for longer than a year, they'd be nothing more than bone by their reanimation which would render any kind of action impossible.

This just won't do.