Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25688537-20150713171118/@comment-26548430-20150713205011

Aside from the many errors in grammar and some of the nonsensical elements, I feel like this story definitely has potential.

Things to maybe consider: -Changing the last step and/or explaining it more. Maybe even have the character die from something that would make sense to anybody that may see him die(Maybe he was stabbed by the Twitter user or something along the lines of that).

-Make the game have some kind of reward or reason for him to play it. Maybe it says there will be consequences but DARES him to play it.

-Maybe develop the character's a bit more. Show more of the daily life of the programmer so that we may follow him in his journey a bit. Maybe have his girlfriend or sister be in the story for a bit.

Just some thoughts, but with some extra work put in I could see this ending up to be an enjoyable and fun-to-read pasta.