Talk:A New Moon/@comment-26399604-20181006231215

The story is alright. I would say that it could use some brushing up. It could be a little more descriptive -- more so with Johnny being in the woods. Also, smells and sounds could really set the tone for this creature's presence.

I think it would be a nice touch to have Johnny see the forest go from being interesting (I'm basing this off how he wanted to hunt with his father and that he perhaps never been inside the tree line) to frightening and intimidating once he encounters the creature -- maybe he even gets lost at first.

It does come off a little weird that only the husband was aware of the moon and its connection to the creature. Perhaps he was keeping from his wife. If that was the case, I think there should be a little more hint of that knowledge -- or maybe even have the mother aware of it too.

Overall, the story's alright, but there's nothing really setting it apart from a generic humanoid monster that kills things. Small tidbits about the rules of the moon, the forest -- off what not to do or ensuring to mark this/that, can really make the plot a little more interesting and build the world you created.