Talk:There's Something Between the Gears/@comment-25052433-20150721182625

Dr. Robotnic can't hold a canlde to this bad boy. Let's turn the crank on the review machine for Something Between the Gears, and see what comes out on the other side.

Creativity: This, right here, is what creativity and originality are all about. This is what it means to take a rather simple concept, like a demon/devil story, and really turn it into something your own. This is by far the most original piece I have reviewed yet, and sits nicely next to an entry like The Mouse Child when it comes to making a story that is ripe with new concepts and creative brilliance. The idea of using a machine worshiping cult certainly took me by surprise, in all the right ways. I loved this one, excellent job.

Quality of Story: This was well written, well thought out and perfectly executed. I won't waste too much time spinning my wheels saying the same things over and over again, so let's just say that this one was a home-run on quality.

Quality of Characters: If there is anything that I would have improved here, it would have been Lucas. I would have liked to have seen more from him. His will power turned out to be quite weak, and while I do admire that he tried to save Alyssa at the end and make things right, he certainly proved to be no match for the machine. You built him really well and made him a likable character that was easy to cheer for, which is why it was sort of a shame that he went down so quickly.

Creepiness: You nailed that in a new and awesome way. The idea of machines as demons was a bit of a risk, but I loved the fact that you went in your own direction, using a mechanical contraption as the demonic entity, rather than a computer or website, as so many stories on here have done before. The creepiness could have been a lot richer had you taken more time to describe things though, as I feel that a lot of the imagery and scenes here were rushed a bit. Still though, you score big on this one.

I will crank out a score of 80 for you on this one, combined with Grim's 98, the machine awards a total of 178 points. Excellent work!

Final Score 178 points.