Talk:The Journey Home/@comment-27893643-20180224170320

-The plot was a good one. It sets you up for the horrifying take on an insane man's POV and I'm always a fan of such stories and it was definitely well done here.

-The concept has been done before but when you are able to make insert unique elements, it can definitely become your own. And I can definitely see that you put effort into doing so and it worked very well.

-There are a couple issues I had with the word choices. Mostly..the heart rushing down to your arsehole metaphor. I mean I get that it's an attempt at humor but it seems a little out of place when it comes to the tone of the story. Also there is one tiny grammar mistake I spotted: "Luckily, I was one of the first people on board so *I* managed to snag myself a window seat." But otherwise the sentences flow very well.

-The imagery in this was just spectacular and you can really put yourself in the chaotic setting of this story and honestly something I would like to be visually adapted. The vividness is one of the main things that can make a story so intriguing.

-As far as the horror goes, I found it to be overall very chilling. A lot of panic and peril makes way for some good vivid storytelling if done right and I found that it was when reading this. I really enjoyed the horror elements and it definitely kept me on the edge of my seat throughout.

So yeah this story was great. I definitely had no trouble getting through it and it was a nice unique take. I'll give it a 4/5 ^^