Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33451975-20171023174304/@comment-33451975-20171026225610

Thank you for taking the time to review my story. I appreciate it. Yeah the part with the tarot cards do seem cheesy. I can use the idea of the Magician trying to kill the protagonist early on without the use of him toying with her. She is a witness after all. I do have a problem with present and past tense even when I was in school. My professors had told me about the tense issue and I am still working on that. I will try my best with the show not tell thing and it will be good practice for me. I am not really new to writing in general. I had practice in writing fanfiction for anime, but I am new to writing horror. Horror is sort of out if my confort zone. I'm more better at  comedy and action/adventure. I do need to imrove though, as you stated. I'll try writing shorter horror tales but I tend to stray and it usually ends up longer. The previous version of this story which  I never posted on this workshop (It's still in my word document) is 18 pages long. I will take a look at the diologue formatting guide I'm sure it will help me with my writing. I'll make the edits tomorrow.