Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37412299-20181105034538/@comment-36627132-20181105061643

Spelling and Grammar Issues: Needs broken down a bit, most of the paragraphs border wall of text. There are quite a few unnecessary commas here and there.

Plot Issues: First off, it's a ritual pasta so naturally I didn't enjoy it. The bit about the devil making babies sign contracts as soon as they are born is just laughable. The devil doesn't trick people by making them sign seemingly harmless contracts, he tricks them by making sin look appealing and by sending tragedies that turn people from or against God.

Plot Issues Continued: Why would the Devil, who is as old as time itself, be only contactable by modern objects and therefore only by modern people? "channel your inner Godfather" the fact that you said that, and named this story after a famous quote from it feels kind of off.