Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39126362-20190414202138/@comment-9041013-20190415233842

Okay so, this is somewhat confusing because the formating makes it weird and I had a hard time figuring out when were there emails and when was it a narrator talking. Try to clarify this format issue, first and foremost.

My second issue with this is this doesn't feel like schizophrenia. The most obvious sign of schizophrenia is abrupted thought and speech. Like, a person's thoughts are random and disorganized and their speech is weird, words and subjects come in randomly out of place. Perception is a bit off, but it's not like complete psychosis. Also vocal hallucinations are the most common.

Now if a person knows they have schizophrenia they take meds, they have a treatment going on hence this whole plot couldn't happen.

Now, I think you should check out what schizophrenia looks like and then put it on paper, in regards to the computer paranoid delusion thing. Also, I kind of doubt people with schizophrenia buy into their paranoid delusions like "ohhh im just gonna accept my haunters because they don't really wanna hurt me". In my opinion, if anything, these delusions could lead them to do something horrible before a sobering realization comes at the end of a psychotic fit.

That would be scary of for example he killed his father, or attempted to over this email exchange only to realize what he had done after the assault had commenced