Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180823132725/@comment-36393004-20180824164932

Break up the conversation between the doctors. They are talking back-to-back and it confuses the reader. When the prescribe the pill, you say "two a day, daily" and I think that's redundant. I think you have a made a big improvement on this story though. It is far more engaging than your previous drafts. I like it, it's not exactly how I would imagine it going but it's your story.