Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30557941-20191228010317/@comment-30557941-20200103042545

BloodySpghetti wrote: If you didn't go the route of "the narrator finds a piece of information that states he's bound to die" this would've been way better. You decided to go that route however, which is a shame.

The trope could be used without becoming ridiculous, but requires an untimely death in some more distant future. One that the protag will try to prevent in the readers imagination - You didn't go that route.

You've realized you've dug yourself a hole and decided to go the easy (and silly way out), in a sense "it was all a joke" style. The moment the ending came the whole build was thrown down the toilet and that kills the story. The podcast is gone, so what's the bloody point of the whole thing? It's underwhelming.

Also, I suppose that if the reading of the episode in which the protags name wasn't "the cliche shift in tone" it would've felt more impactful because it doesn't border on the stupidly obvious supernatural tropiness of the bad kind. I see your point. I felt a little like this was a story I needed out of my system, because it had been in my head for like three years, but I knew before writing it that it was kind of cliche. I figured I'd make the protagonist at least kind of genre savvy (without directly referencing any other creepypastas) and see if it helped.