Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29015383-20160714081944/@comment-28420405-20160714121515

I very much enjoyed this. I think every person gets a bit uneasy when they have to go into surgery, and this pasta illustrates a main reason for that fear (you know, besides not waking up afterwards). You tapped into something I think we all are afraid of, so kudos for writing something that can connect with most readers.

Your spelling and grammar were just fine -- I didn't notice anything of mention. Well, I did find one error:

"That hadn't been to bad, I muse idly." - "to" should be "too"

Other than that, I really liked this, especially for being a micropasta. It can be hard to freak someone out with so little text, and I applaud you for being able to do so, as that is a weakness of mine.

I'm not an authority here by any means, so you might want to wait for some more feedback, but I think this is a very nice short story.