Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37708694-20181205182102/@comment-35711173-20181205191536

Ouitalkcreepy,

I am so glad to see you here! Welcome to the Writer's Workshop.

Please read some other threads in this forum. See how we all take each other's stories apart. It's not a personal attack. We truly want to help each other.

This story can be improved and made into good creepypasta. Coming here is a really good first step.

Grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. issues can be identified by free online tools. I recommend starting with that. As you explore those tools and look at your story one phrase at a time.

Please read this BLOG entry on use of tools:

Basic Spell and Grammar Checking

The next thing I advise you to do is read the story out loud to yourself several times. If you stumble on a sentence when you read it, there's something wrong that needs fixing.

I always tell people to edit mercilessly. If it doesn't drive the story forward then take it out. I generally cut out 1/3 to 1/4 of the story in editing. In particular, I have noticed that the worst sentences gramatically are usually the ones that also are the most expendable.

Good luck,

Dr. Bob