Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-25891880-20150502151900/@comment-24101790-20150606165259

Minor corrections first:

Minor wording issues: “Don’t worry gang.” Mrs. Patty, our homeroom teacher, said." (The story is told in third person. "Our" should be "the".

Minor capitalization: “What’s in the chalkboard?” She (she) said, with a pause afterward." Typically words after dialogue do not need capitalization if it is a continuation. They should only be capitalized if it is a proper noun or if it is the start of a new sentence.

All in all, I enjoyed the story. It reminded me of another story about a man hearing sounds coming from his shower wall and when he goes to investigate (after a shower), he finds it's infested with wasps. Although there are also true events of people seeing their walls leaking viscous fluid (later found out to be honey) and breaking it open to stir up a bee's nest.

It was a nice twist although I am wondering how come the other kids or the teacher didn't hear anything. It was a good story and the fact that it can/has happened gives it another dimension. Good job.