Talk:Room 205/@comment-26399604-20160210140246

I actually enjoyed this story pretty much. There was a great deal of emotion involved with a hint of mystery. The twist of the whole ordeal in room 205 was pretty nice as well, including the faces referenced into the dream. The story as a whole almost reads like a movie.

I will note that I did spot several areas that need to be addressed. The correction will be contained within the "[]":

+Images of Roman at the [beach] flashed in my mind.

+[If] (I suggest italicizing the word instead) Roman was really waiting in room 205, would he still be all put together?

+After a short while I finally reached my destination, and before me in the headlights appeared [a] sign.

+The guy looked at [me] for a good three seconds and asked, “What was his name?”

+Kevin giggled and, with a dark wisp, instructed that [I] screw my pain away.

+In a state between a world of hurt and one of longing, gripped his right nipple between my fingertips and kissed [the back] of his neck. +I turned around[. I did not see] Kevin, but a naked, bloody Roman with stab wounds all over his body.

+Blood poured from his mouth and [fear] rose to the top of my lungs.

+“The trial that determines whether [you] are guilty or innocent,” she told me.