User blog comment:XxPUPwomanXx/hi/@comment-24074971-20131026211610

ok, you want to build up suspense, then release it, then when there guard is down, you shock them, ie:        jonny was on his way home from school, he had been staying late and it was getting dark and cold. he thought he would have gotten out sooner,  when heard heard rustling coming from the bushes "eh probably just the wind" and kept walking, when he heard tghe pitter pateer of little feet. he turned around again, and stopped in his tracks, then took a sigh of relief, he was looking a a small brown dog. he turned around and continued home.

-- his parents were getting upset when johnny didnt return home last night, and called the police. they found his body in a nearby bush covered in bloody bite wounds. the only clue to his death were a set of bloody footprints on the sidewalk- dog footprints.

and dont use cliches as in the comment below lists, because they can be hard to use without ruining the story. so keep it suttle and detailed - TJ