Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20150521072854

I just wrote this. I think it's kinda good.

"I am aerodynamic

I swerve through the air

An invisable manic.

A gun in my hands

And a shell in the gun

A tear in my eye

Till the deed has been done

A deed to be done,

Till the gun is all hollow

Then I fill it back up

Find someone to follow.

I follow so well,

For I'm never noticed,

I'm never acknowledged

And that's why you're hopeless"

I don't have a name for it. And I also have no clue if it's as good as I say.

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