Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32157706-20180510160443/@comment-7064562-20180511090508

This feels more like an idea you should explore on, and instead of making it a list, make it an actual story.

On top of that, the ending seems a little much. To much happened, to many outcomes, etc. You should try and keep it nice and simple. It seems like you tried to cram any kind of ending you could there.