Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20151004213335/@comment-25170312-20151005033148

KillaHawke1 wrote: Well written, but not really scary. You might want to go paranormal with this. Like some curse/consequence from breaking the rules, intentionally set for kids, knowing they would take more than they should. Thanks! That's an interesting idea. I was going more the urban legend route, but that's something to think about. Still, I'd rather see if I can make it a little scarier without changing the plot.