Talk:EmpyrealInvective's Collection of Short Stories/@comment-5932462-20180708225933

I like your premises, but I think you need to work on your endings. The twists are good but a lot of them get bogged down with too much description so they lose the punch they should have. Aside from that, your writing is good. "Living Alone", "You Tried..." and "The Glow" were some of my favorites.