Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25177838-20140714160201/@comment-25558572-20140715000303

Supercsilver wrote: it was original since it did come out of from my thoughts, it may have the same concept but the story and character itself is completely original. but please i would really appreciate it if you tell me Exactly my errors aside from the ones you've told me so i can improve my writing since this was my first attempt in doing so. There are far too many for me to list. You have a huge amount of run-on sentences (ones that are too long), you need to make a new space every time someone else speaks, and you must keep the tense and perspective you choose in the story the same throughout the whole thing.

Put this into a Microsoft word document and you'll see exactly where you have errors. I'm not going to spend time correcting someting you should have done yourself.

And it doesn't matter if it "came out of your thoughts", it still follows the Jeff formula, which is against the submission rules. If you haven't read Jeff the Killer, take a look at it and you'll see what I mean.