Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160727122520/@comment-27838637-20160805093002

Christian: Thanks very much for the critiques and compliments. I agree that there should have been some more 'post-hair' mayhem, but I was unsure if that would have dragged the creepyness out too long. I might add another day entry where there can be some more goings-on. I'll wait to see what Frank has to say first, so I can get all the editing done in one sweep.

As for the ending, upon reading it now, I too feel it is a little rushed. I wasn't too sure how to write it, and I was knackered the night I wrote the conclusion, so that will probably be worth me extending on a little bit aswell. I was originally going to make it alot more violent, but I'm always too scared to be too edgy. Mainly for the fact that many people hate excessive gore and violence (except Jay ten).

As for the whole 'car being more than just a car' plotline, I was also a little worried. It was always the plan to make the car that way, but I was worried that the reveal may have come across as too forced/spontaneous (or too ridiculous). So it's good to see you didn't think so.

Frank: Take all the time you need mate! I'm keen to recieve feedback but I suppose I can wait an extra day for you to tell me your thoughts. Anymore and your pushing it though ;) ... Hope you get better soon! Seriously though, don't stress yourself. I'm contemplating getting one of the dictators to look over the story too, just so I know if it will pass the Quality Standards.

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