Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20150222172009/@comment-25170312-20150222174658

I'm sorry, but I don't think this story can be saved. If you worked with someone to fix the grammar (and removed all the random quotation marks) it would still be a very poor story. You have a horrific event happening on a kids show, and they don't immediately cancel the show and get slapped with a lawsuit? That's impossible. Then it basically says that the show will keep going and that more kids will come for him to kill. None of this makes sense. Maybe if there was some supernatural explanation, but there isn't. If I were you, I'd just try again with something else, and have someone help you with the english.