Talk:The Stairs and the Doorway/@comment-25041416-20140620200033

The third paragraph, about how your poor ol' hardworkin' pa went to school with the Dean at the college and worked out some kind of nonsense deal with him for your tuition--get rid of that. First of all, you spend too much time describing your just plain folk background and the piece is too long and has pacing issues to start with so find a way to show, not tell, your background with a few quick details instead of dawdling and weighing down the narrative. Second, the kind of arrangement you're describing just doesn't happen that way in modern education institutions and sounds more like something Ma and Pa Walton might have worked out with that tharrrr Big City College back in olden times.

It's a helluva good piece though. Good enough that it really really deserves to be reworked.