Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190113014104/@comment-33904527-20190114212045

BloodySpghetti wrote: The story jumps from scene to scene without any clear transitions, it kind of ruins the immersion. Try to make it less jumpy and confusing. You can't just switch perspectives; just try to be a true all knowing narrator with this story. Don't try to show us the events through the eyes of the characters.

Also, the story really feels like a bunch of standalone paragraphs at times. Try to connect the various points. Could you give some examples as to exactly where the points feel disconnected or where the transitions are unclear?

Thanks.