Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26525489-20150623192655/@comment-26525489-20150623204354

Thank you for your feedback! I do intend for this to be a multiple entry series, so the story will continue further after the events of this entry, don't worry. I agree that the exploring the house scene could use a bit of work, do you think that it lacks detail in certain aspects and could use expansion? Or is the entire idea a bit overdone for your taste? There are several ways I could go into a little more detail before the attic scene, possibly to help a build in tension, and I could expand a bit more after the door opening as well to try and lengthen the climax. Do you see either of those options as being potentially beneficial to the story? Obviously, the first entry in a continuing story like this isn't going to be the creepiest, but I want to make sure it's a high enough quality story that people will be hooked and want to continue reading further.