Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181017225809/@comment-35711173-20181018030800

This has a lot going for it. It needs a good editing and pruning, but by your notes you know that too.

You have an intro that rockets you into the story/

You deliver in the creepy and horror.

The resolution is good.

I like the overall idea.

Your Cat character doesn't feel like a girl. If that's an objective, you need work. It doesn't sound like a girl wrote it. Google "Difference between men and women writers" and you'll see what I mean. There's even a computer program that can tell.

http://www.hackerfactor.com/GenderGuesser.php