Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20151213010850/@comment-24101790-20151218160441

I like the improvements. They add a bit to the next-door neighbor/whoever is squatting in that apartment without giving away too much detail. I really can't think of any other suggestions that aren't subjective/preferential ("Probably the old hag from next door is being weird again." does make me wonder why John has come to that conclusion, but it really doesn't need to be elaborated on.).

I think you did a good job with building the tension and unease the protagonist is feeling without spending too much time/focus on it. Well done, overall I enjoyed the story and thought it was well-written. Best of luck posting it and I hope other people enjoyed it as much as I did.