Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20190110203828/@comment-35711173-20190111230118

L0CKED334,

I am beginning the check. There will be more feedback coming, about ten times as much. All of it very similar in scope. This is a very solid story and I am going for broke to make it as perfect as possible.

You have nuts (plural) in the sentence below. Nutty would be in agreement with the number of people referenced - a family, which is singular.

"I am sure they all thought our entire family was a little nutty but we never let it bother us."

Punctuation errors according to Grammarly: Not needed comma.

The clouds had grown thicker, and rolled above us.

Needs a comma after point. At some point, he had lost control of his bladder and the evidence was down his pant leg.

Comma not needed after shoulder. I tossed my brother’s arm over my shoulder, and helped him up.