Talk:Demonic Dreams/@comment-5269370-20140108144215

Good for a start, although it could use a bit of work. Try to be a bit more descriptive instead of just telling us the sequence of events. Also, more character build up, and raw emotion of how the person felt about being tormented by the demon, would really give great imagery to this pasta and help create an atmosphere going into the sequel. My advice would be to improve upon this before creating a series!