Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180607073559/@comment-5733573-20180608065530

DrBobSmith wrote: Jdeschene wrote: A couple of sentences that need commas:

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BloodySpghetti wrote: [...]

Over all, pretty nice.

Work on the technical advice Jdeschene gave you though. I have worked on the technical part. I hadn't thought that complete details in the stabbing eluded to in the second dream part would help. Would it? No, they wouldn't. Meaning no disrespect, I think Bloody may have missed the point of the story. The conceit is that Noah is seeing through the eyes of killers in his dreams, the second of which is Jack the Ripper, yes?