Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20150223054547/@comment-25975226-20150223060521

This is definitely going to get deleted for not meeting the quality standards. I can't understand half of what you've written. I'm going to assume that English isn't your first language. There are far too many spelling and grammar errors that I can't write them all in this comment. But it wouldn't really matter, because this story isn't creepy.

This is a very generic story with a not very convincing protagonist and a lacking plot. Sorry to tell you this, and I'm not claiming to be the world's best writer myself, but I can't even review this because I think it just needs to be scrapped. I think that would be the best thing for you to do.