Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25011469-20140601201840/@comment-24976741-20140601212359

To be quite honest I found this boring to all belief as well as having quite a bit of punctuational errors. The whole plot just seemed murdane especially the ending which really wasn't terrifying or putting the whole plot together at all in anyway. To me I feel like this needs alot more work done on it as well as a more in detailed story line with just more to it. Also when telling the time either say it like 1:00 a.m. or p.m. or 1 a.m. or p.m.