Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190309004843/@comment-33904527-20190309203016

I don't quite get some of your points here.

"How could he know when was the right time" Ok, I see how that is implausible. I'll most likely add in something to justify this. Perhaps I'll change it so that the protagonist only decides to keep the baby for himself when he recognises Annie (meaning that he wouldn't have planned the whole thing in advance).

Annie doesn't randomly die. Death through childbirth still happens, you know. She dies because A) her mental state is broken after being kidnapped, delivered by the person who raped her, and witnessing another person get their head blown open. And B) she's completely exhausted from giving birth, not to mention the terrible conditions she gives birth in. Reasons for her death are completely logical. It's not like she makes a full recovery and drops dead the next day from a heart attack or something.

They are out in the sticks, miles away from civilization and any other person. Of course no-one is going to hear a gunshot out there. I guess I'll try and make this clearer?