Talk:The Condo/@comment-25326117-20160518022226

1):  Matthew was an average college graduate, top of the Dean’s list every semester as he was at the University of Kansas; at that time Matt met the love of his life, Laura.

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2): Laura had also attended the same university and they met in one of their social sciences class in their second semester.

(I thought it would help if I combined the sentences for you as a way to help you with adding and this time).

3): They knew immediately that they were in love and after college Matt and Laura decided to move together; they found a place in Louisiana, which was a nice condo.

(I thought the and and the ; would help with the last three sentences, which I took to combining.  I hope it helps you out).

4): The condo was in a rough area but Matt and Laura both studied anthropology, so they liked living in an environment where people don’t act the same as everyone else.

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5): One night Matt was woken up by a sound that sounded like glass breaking in their kitchen, which was in the downstairs half of the home.

(I just thought a comma and which was would help clarify your meaning).

Overall, I think the story was pretty short and needed some more build up to the previous family that lived in the condo before them. Maybe, ask the neighbors and they give a vague response and have Matt do more digging into the condo's past. Did they choose the condo because it was cheap? Maybe, Jill could have given them a vague response like the neighbors that I had mentioned and Matt comes up empty-handed at first. It was pretty average. I was also expecting Matt to investigate the screams as he ignored his wife's pleading for him to ignore them, but he gradually comes to the point of suicide and writes INNOCENCE in his own blood, maybe not on the ceiling, but perhaps on the hard tiled floor if they have that.