Talk:Journal of the Lost Undead/@comment-16086328-20140505215129

I really like how you took the concept of a game and turned it into a journal story, rather than do the typical "haunted game" approach that EVERYONE does. Haha. One note to bear in mind: when it comes to journal stories, it's important to break down each log. Otherwise, it'll be seen as one entry, and the final moments will come off as chaotic scribbling and raving that appears out of nowhere. That can easily be resolved by seperating each journal entry. Also, the author's note at the end should be placed at the beginning, so that it's seperate from the narrative. Other than those two, just the usual thing every member should look over - grammar, punctuation, spacing, etc.

But I like the idea! It's pretty cool. 7/10 :)