Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26500716-20150718032824/@comment-26715482-20150718043943

Where do I start, it started off interesting enough up until Sean started becoming hostile towards everyone, when I read that I knew exactly where it was going. Throughout the story I was holding my head sighing a certain points like these:

A thirteen year old boy grabs his older brother by the neck and manages to shove him against the wall with ease.

Maya not reporting Seans behavior to her parents made little to no sense and made her into the one who got everyone murdered.

The fact that the thirteen year old manage to murder the family without any of them harming or killing him even with the father had shot at Sean.

Also Maya in the end was cringe worthy espically this part right here " I eventually went fully insane, and helped Sean in his string of what the police investigators called, 'the faceless killings'. Now I've regained myself", ironic that she conveniently regained her sanity to write this.

In short this is a cliched pasta and yes it didn't make sense why it was taken down for being considered a rip off of slenderman, but it rather seems to follow the generic story of "Something happens to teen they go insane become a killer with a knife."