User blog:Icydice/Ww story

Hey guys, I was just wondering if any of you could stop by a story of mine in the WW and give me some thoughts.

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:605063

This story is an entry for Helel's Valentine contest, which can be found here http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Helel_ben_Shahaar/Helel%27s_"Bullet_for_my_Valentine"_Metal_Contest

Thanks and tata!