Talk:Ghost Marowak/@comment-25471033-20190103221828

This was actually nice to read. Unlike so many Pokepastas, back when they were allowed, this one strived to stay away from the abundance of cliches that they are usually riddled with. It was slightly creepy, but not dramatically over the top like most others of this genre are. I guess the one thing I had a problem with was how it was obvious that you were trying to stray away from the cliches, saying things like "no, it wasn't all bloodied, it was just this" or "it wasn't really anything unordinary, just MAROWAK". Try saying it in a way that cuts out the first part, leaving things like "my player sprite was a (blank)" or "The name of it was simply MAROWAK". Anyways, this was still really good for a Pokepasta. 9/10