Talk:Chelsea Dearest/@comment-6862307-20140927132644

This story was alright, but nothing great. In fact it is a little disappointing from one standpoint: Your writing is very, very good. It flows nicely, is descriptive, and the poem (Which was the best part of the story, I feel.) was a great little addition. But the plot itself honestly just felt a bit derivative and all too familiar. All I could think of at times was of stories like "The Ring," a supernatural story where someone investigates a mysterious oddity and after a time the evil presence comes after them and sadly little is done to make this story standout from other, similar stories - the lone exception being that creepy-ass poem. More could have been done to make this story stand out, put more focus on actual character development so that we care about the protagonist and not only that put them through more anguish before the big supernatural event finally comes. More happenings should have occurred before the finale, bring forth some imaginative ways of fucking with an interesting protagonist and this story would be much, much better.

Now do take note that I am not saying this story was awful. It was an alright read, and as stated your writing is superb and I look forward to checking out some more of your stories. I'll give this a 6/10.