Talk:The Piper/@comment-10950063-20131120001614/@comment-24188662-20131120033055

It's based off the pied piper, therefore the music is not random; if there weren't any music, it would not make sense. I use proper grammar, sentence structure, and punctuation; my sentences are fine. And I fully understand that it isn't completely perfect, it hasen't been fully edited yet. If you followed my deviantart (Which I'm in no way saying you need to) it would make more sense. Also, I'm in the process of re-writing it because, I myself don't much like the turnout. But even so, I wanted to post it because I only get to use the internet about once a week and I didn't wish to wait another week to put this here.

As for the tense, I have always had a bad rap working with tenses, I'll look into fixing it.

Thank you,

-Zain