Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180607073559/@comment-5733573-20180607185920

A couple of sentences that need commas:

As I walked from Musgrave Street station to my beat on the docks I was very thankful for the warmth of my thick coat and comforted by the heavy weight I had slipped in my coat pocket.

Needs a comma after "docks."

"Daddy are you alright,” Esther asked.

Needs a comma after "Daddy."

I noticed that you changed the boy's name to Leo which, while not strictly Biblical, is still a popular Popes' name. :-P  I didn't mean to imply that the Biblical names were a problem, only that I noticed them. :-)