Talk:Necrosleep/@comment-5726907-20150212013542

Was it well written? Yes. Was the plot buildup well done? Yes! However, it was so riddled with cliches and cringe-worthy moments it led me to not like the story.

1. Hail A. Stan... are you serious? The most thinly veiled anagram of all time, I do not like this. It feels almost insulting. At least the Roman numeral 666 was more intricate.

2. A pentagram and a goat... and he DIDN'T think devil?

3. Dog Head Revival was already proven fake. Dragged me further away.

4. Seems to have a lot of things taken from Psychosis. Just not as well done.

5. The message board conversations were.... well I'm sorry but they were terrible. This seems written by someone who has never been to a message board but has heard of them and took the classic message board cliches a bit too seriously. This isn't how people talk.

I don't understand how this won pasta of the month, I'd think it would need to be improved to garner that kind of attention. But I guess not. With that being said, it's a good concept and all, but it has execution flaws.