Talk:The Class/@comment-25052433-20140806201542

A very ambitious pasta. Let's review.

What went right:

-For what this story was meant to be, I would say just about everything was done right. Your use of description and backstory for your character helped to create a vivid image of what the reader was meant to see.

-I love the fact that you kept this one really clean of cliché gore and jump scare writing. Until the end, nothing was really scary, just, unsettling, which to me, is the mark of a promising story teller.

What could have improved my experience:

-There were a few grammatical errors, but nothing that was difficult to fix. Just remember, never start a sentence with 'but' or 'because' and you'll be fine. I wasn't sure about 'maths' being a word, but I figured from the writing style that you are from the UK, so maybe 'maths' is the proper wordage on your side of the ocean.

Bottom line is this, the story was quick, clean and crisp. I could have gone on longer, but I honestly feel for what you were trying to accomplish, you kept the length just about right.

Great job. 8.5/10