Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25125832-20150815045713

Ok, I tried to fix the problems present in my deleted story Nostalgic. I made it longer, added some stuff, and looked it over twice. Reviews are appreciated.

It was moving day. I was in my room, packing up my stuff for college. I began moving all the things I wanted from my childhood room into cardboard boxes. As I packed up my stuff, I noticed my large wooden toybox my dad had made for me when I was little. I opened it up and glanced at my old, dusty toys. Suddenly, I felt a wave of nostalgia sweep over me.

I began to remember all the fun moments from my childhood. I remembered playing with my toy cars in the driveway. I remembered catching frogs at the nearby pond. I remembered losing my first tooth.

The memories started flooding my mind. I remembered putting a plate of cookies and a glass of milk out for Santa Claus on Christmas Eve. I remembered having tickle fights with my dad. I remembered embarking on imaginary adventures with my stuffed animals. I remembered playing with my action figures on the carpet. I remembered having make-believe battles with the monsters in my closet.

I remembered when those monsters came out.

To this day, I still remember the raspy breathing on my bedside. 