Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20200215012044/@comment-9041013-20200218121221

I liked it over all. One thing that did bother me was how dramatic the reaction of William was to everything as he waited in the queue, especially since he never bothered just giving up his place and leaving the supposed attraction. ''It's almost like the story requirement never allowed him too. ''Not the biggest fan writing something that isn't sensible just because the plot demands. You could mentioned something that disallowed people who got the ticket to leave before getting their fate read, something beyond the teller's control that we find about later and don't really know if it applies just to the tend or not.

Also, just an observation, Don't consider it, but you might find some humor in this point just as I did. If he were Emperor Wilhelm II that would be even more fitting the Emperor card, both upright and reversed given Wilhelm's role in history. That would also be humoursly dark and fitting to the genre we're dealing here; because WW1 was a hotbed of horrors.