Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44713211-20191224181854/@comment-33904527-20191231014230

I would advise splitting up the huge chunk of writing into smaller, fragmented paragraphs. It looks more appealing and generally helps the flow of the pasta. Also, ditch the drawing of Moro. It's really cheap and tacky and looks like a 6 year-old drew it for their parents to stick up on the fridge.

In terms of the plot...well there isn't really much of a plot here. It's a pretty run-of-the-mill 'lost episode' pasta. I've never been very fond of the genre myself, but in order to make a good pasta out of this topic, you need to make it stand out somehow. This really has nothing that makes it unlike every other lost episode pasta out there. It follows the standard template of a character watching TV, only to find a weird/distorted episode of some show that gives them the creeps and once viewed, is never found again.

Basically, if you want to make this pasta stand out, you need to think outside the box somehow.