Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44101957-20191029014351/@comment-9041013-20191030124327

This story definitely has something going on for it. It's not perfect however, something is amiss. I don't wanna say it's rushed, because it's not it. Maybe you need to establish better in your own head what it is that happens. It feels like you haven't decided for yourself what you want this to be; a monster or a hallucination. It starts off as a monster, because a hallucination (with the whole medications thing) and then it became a monster again.

I suggest keep it on the hallucination plain, it's kind of scarier because you can almost enterilize something like that. It doesn't have to be strickly a real life neurological disease like schizophrenia. Just make it a passing mention there is something wrong with the narrator and give them some more symptoms if you do choose this route. Look up some neuro-psychological disorders, see what they cause and try to impliment that.

You can always combine supernatural and medical, but that's gonna be hard to pull off effectively. Maybe cap it off with "but I did take the pills" or something when the monster shows up.

You definitely need to build this a bit more, expand on the plot and make us care and know the narrator better to feel for them better.