Talk:Closed Eyes/@comment-28736137-20160613053720

Well written, but I thought that the whole," I don't have much time," thing was a bit too cliche. Maybe if you purposely mispelled somethings, then it would have an entirely different affect. But, you managed to write in excellent grammar and be descriptive, even though you're about to die in less than a few minutes.

Another thing I didn't understand was how you knew so much about the evil entity. You said it passed down along generations, but who could have possibly lived to tell you that? The survivors of this evil being had their memories of this experience erased. It's possible that they warned you in the same way as you did us, but, how would you have come upon it? You said that your day would be completely normal, despite the few little mishappenings. How would you have known to research this, if you would have never expected it in the first place?

Overall, it was a nice, delicious pasta with misshapen, questionable meatballs.