Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25011469-20140601201840/@comment-24918243-20140602021435

I think the problem is there is not enough on the story to give it that "creep" factor. I hate to say this, but you see stuff that is way more scary in the 8 o'clock news.

Okay, so he disappeared and you did not get your booty call for the night. He had an old B movie running in the background. Sorry...it's just mundane. For all we know, he went down to score some drugs or to the 7-eleven and got mugged and killed. Yeah his phone was at the house, maybe he forgot it there.

There is nothing in the story that really suggests anything supernatural happened here.