Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27697299-20160130012702/@comment-27008899-20160201165319

Some continuity issues here. When you make your protag die then it is difficult to justify them telling the story. You could have incorporated this into the note. Could have ended with her hiding. I am also not a fan of the news real ending. What you could try is telling this backwards. Begin with the news real and her death, then follow her back to the car accident and the first time she saw it. That would be interesting.