Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444401-20160125011233/@comment-26364137-20160126195229

Your writing is pretty good, in contrast to alot of stuff posted on Writer's Workshop, which will make it alot easier for you to improve it. The story has a very similar plot to "So I Thought I Ate a Spider in My Sleep...", that may not be a huge problem in itself. However - my biggest concern with this story is that it is not creepy until the last paragraph; the last three sentences. Maybe you should try to build up some more tension before the conclusion? It will gain more depth and more curiosity to the tumour and why it's there. Something that also may have caused this is the title; it was no surprise that it was a spider or several spiders popping out of there; therefore downplaying the climax alot. But by all means; this is just my opinion, I'm no expert. So take my advice as you want. :)Good luck!