Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20141231040024/@comment-24040907-20150108233643

Ahh, yes, I see. That’s quite fascinating actually. What is it about these theoretical roads, though, that makes people assume they are magical? Do they think of them as Crop-circles? I mean, they’re just roads, right?...Right? (O_O)



I remember now. I read Curiosity first and then the prequels afterwards, so I suppose I must’ve gotten confused.



I found a continuity error. There is a character that you first identify as Izumi, but at certain points in the story you change the spelling to Isumi.

At one point you wrote: “…which didn’t make a whole lot of sense since the window pretty high off the ground and there…”

Please insert “is” between “window” and “pretty”

The only other error I found was when you wrote: “Even though me and Mizaki knew both cats were in the laundry room asleep, we still got up to check it out—“

Technically it should be “Mizaki and I knew”, but since this is part of a colloquial dialogue I think you should keep it the way it is.

By the way, my spellchecker doesn’t register “ceilingward” as a real word, but this software could be outdated. The word choice makes sense to me, anyway.