Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25314309-20140817062709/@comment-25037895-20140817071732

I can tell you why it was deleted. It's very superfluous and vague.

You mention the reader only experiencing true fear once the light releases you from its grasp. Then you drop the subject and turn to "vanishing into thin air". As if that is not overused.

The whole story is rather jumpy with little plot, so I could see why an administrator or rollbacker would delete it.