Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180824132506/@comment-9041013-20180824201949

RedNovaTyrant wrote: Oh, and just a note about those last two sins, maybe have Rowan remark something about the sixth monster when Larry kills Nicholas, and perhaps a better last line for Gluttony might go like this (steal it if you want idgaf):

''The fat fiend then gestured to Larry. “I know it’s rude to ask, but you know, the boy won’t last for too long, so do you mind bringing over the girl once you take her off the noose she’s currently hung from?”''

''With a paranoid, anger stricken look, Larry nodded slightly and began to walk off, but stopped after a moment and turned back to him. "You only spoke of six monsters. What's the seventh?"''

''Rowan's grinned widened maliciously. "Why, you're looking at him."''

That would cover all the sins and Rowan's initial rant about the seven monsters ;) Ah I see I see.