Talk:Safety First/@comment-29507836-20161009033022

I loved how you turned something that everyone knows and turn it into something horrifying. I also liked the way the plot was executed, having done otherwise would've made this a lot worse. I also liked the surreal description you gave, and it felt like I was seeing everything through his eyes.

However, I saw a few spelling errors that I will edit. I also think that the writing changed styles midway, suddenly increasing in depth of description and removing the curse words. I think that consistency should be noted in the story. There was also a lack of character development.

Overall, I rate it a 5/10.