Talk:What Remains.../@comment-33089254-20170916020411

Whilst I appreciate that you were trying to use the voice of a disaffected teenager, or some bullshit, you broke that illusion with the semblance of a good vocabulary in the opening paragraph. Therefore, I couldn't read past the second one following this:

'Whenever we were hanging out; we would get either high, drunk, or both' - just what the fuck is that semicolon doing there?

'... under the influence of some chemical means at the time.' - Were you under the influence of some chemical when you added the irredeemably redundant word 'means' to that sentence?

'... on our way to getting tore up.' - Do I need to explain this to you? Yes, I think I do - it's 'torn'.

'I was just dawning on this realization' - will it ever dawn upon you that you don't dawn upon anything, those things dawn upon you.

Good work! 10/10.