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LilTwistedMe wrote: His decline is pretty quick. In some places it seems a bit rushed. Could you try slowing down a bit? Maybe add some description into the story?

" One time my friend Greg passed behind me while I was working and called my name. But he didn’t appear in the mirror. Another time, I was walking along the length of it when my reflection… it almost seemed to stop for a moment, like it was inspecting a part of the mirror. "

This seems like the incident that started it all for the main character. Could you try to rephrase it for clarity? Was he holding the mirror? How did it feel? Did he touch the glass? Maybe his coworker stopped and waved to him? Did the main character jolt or almost drop the mirror? How was he feeling?

It's a good premise. Have you watched the movie "Mirrors," with Keifer Sunderland?

I should really drive that this was a very rough draft haha. But yeah, it is rushed, just wanted to get the basic plot down and then I'll stretch it out as I work it more.

And no, I haven't seen that movie before. Does it have a similar premise or is it just another good mirror story?