Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27861562-20160224223100/@comment-24101790-20160224224117

Your story was deleted as it was one large paragraph, there were multiple punctuation (quotations missing from dialogue, commas/colons missing before the introduction of dialogue, question marks missing from questions), wording (awkward wording: "My body was leaking of sweat", " It was as if a smog of darkness had descended around my house.", "The bedroom door slithered open.", etc), and story issues (the story feels incredibly rushed, there's little description here, and there is little build-up to the introduction of the monster.)

There is a lot of work that needs to be done here and the story needs drastic re-writing to bring it up to quality standards.