Talk:Never Go into an Old McDonald's/@comment-24877518-20150401074501/@comment-25334673-20150401135501

Oh, I was definitely inspired by Abandoned by Disney. I loved the atmosphere it created and I wanted to expand that style into other territories. However, it was only an inspiration, not some cookie cutter formula for me to follow.

The writer of Abandoned by Disney sets up absolutely no paranormal elements (besides a few whispers) until the very last section of the story. Mine was built upon the fact that the protagonist knew there was something paranormal about the old McDonald's but didn't take it as seriously as he should have. I didn't shock the readers at the end, I was trying to disturb throughout. Although I must not have achieved the desired effect.

Also, everything I wrote was based on things that are actually happening. McDonald's is remodeling every single restaurant in America, there was a merry-go-round restaurant in lancaster (someone might want to verify that, I've never been to Lancaster, I just googled everything), and Oroska is a small town in the state I live (undisclosed) that does have a really creepy old mcdonald's that's out of business.

I'm still new to this genre, this is only my second creepypasta to date so if you have any truly constructive criticism, I would love to hear it.