Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28858691-20170715211658/@comment-28858691-20170716023021

AVisciousRainbow

Thanks for all the constructive critisizm but I did want to elaborate on a few things. Firstly, with the strange boxes, I don't know either. They just appeared when I posted this. I have no idea why it hapoened honestly

With Cave, I tried to set it up that his motive was basic bitterness. I will probably elaborate on it in kater drafts (have it that the higher ups are say, taking funding from Cave's projects to divert to Cynthia's AI project)

I am most definitely going to change up that part with the hackers. Give them more of a motive and redo the part with how they got in. The part currently in the story is just a quick part I threw together

Concerning Cynthia and the AI being deleted. I do plan to elaborate and show more of Cynthia struggling between wanting to know more about the AIs advancment and just being happy it happened, and I do plan to change it up and have it that something else happens to another AI (maybe have ut be stored away like you said) and the AI just misunderstands that as them deleting the other AI

now for the mysterious person and the virus. This is probably gonna be the part I should work on most but let me explain, I have another story (well not a full story. More of a bil for a character) this character is a demon who basically wants to screw over anyone and everyone. The demon made the virus to advance the AI and make it a killer and just told the hackers it'd delete the AI. As for why and how he did that. He used his demonic abilities and some programming skill to create the virus and did it for the same reason he does pretty much anything, to see the world burn, so too speak. I do plan to elaborate and actually show the demon and hint at his true plans in a later draft of the story