Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20170208005947/@comment-31532017-20170208064821

Noting/Writing as I move along; first & utmost I like how you've written out your story, not too much description yet enough for us to picture it out for ourselves, kudos for that. On another hand though, it did felt quite short & the plot, I believe to have some issues.

For starters, if the protagonist claimed that nobody inside a dense rain could see inside it; how could she have located her victims without messing up? Even more so, depending on her targets; some would've actually fought back, if so; how would she have reacted?

Furthermore, love & like; there's a difference between both of them while in writing. I suggest looking Thesaurus, if you're looking forward in avoiding repetitions (Something which, most micro-pastas should avoid).

All in all, I could probably see this staying up in the wiki; but some of the points I mentioned should be addressed before doing so.