Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180724100603/@comment-9041013-20180724153000

OOOOO Daddy sound's like a nice man... I'd definitely like to meet DADDY... and make him my biatch!

Okay okay, jokes aside.

I like this one better, it's less crammed and filled with hopes of getting from 1 to 100mph in half a second. This one actually has solid build and a decent pace. The point does not across until the end but it gets somewhat creepy with the kids insistence on calling his old man "Daddy", it is really an instance in which I kept asking myself, why does he ONLY use that one word for his father.

While might take it to some adult contextes, I found it more indicatory of the kid having a few loose screws since his old man is definitely not right in the dome (and that is genetic in many cases). The kid kind of reminds me of how onlooker would've described Ed Gein; a quiet and peaceful odd ball. Thats the kid and boy that's not exactly not disturbing. It is even more so.

I don't know why but that ending is just perfect, the climax is there, yet it subtle, and that subtlty is what makes it so good because this is a reflection of how these things happen in reality.

Anyhow... it's probably a new practice, since no one's noticed the Freddy Krueger who's cannibalising their children in town.