Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36070549-20190502221204/@comment-9041013-20190503234139

My suggestion would be; write the whole thing and then bring it here.

After that we can talk.

I do think you're starting out a little too hot... As a reader, I don't want to be thrown into the action straight away, unless the story is very short and the whole plot is "the action". Otherwise you should establish who are the characters, what are their goals and conflicts and what is the background etc. As it is now you just throw us at the ending of the "The Thing" in a way. That's not a great way to start a longer story. If you plan on going backwards in the plot and using this as an eye catching exposition; then maybe.