Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25891880-20150213234540/@comment-26109347-20150325150619

I mean it doesn't really flow that well. If you add some transitions where appropriate, and I say appropriate because sometimes you may want a certain part to feel choppy, it will make the writing flow much better and feel less choppy. Then again, you don't want to overdo the transitions, either.

Btw, and this isn't to do with your story, I like the avatar.