User blog comment:SupremeKai4/Creepypasta Reviews/@comment-5701213-20130215065917

Well if you could read my story SPLIT and give me some feedback, that would be much appreciated. I just recently started writing and one of my friends thinks its okay but I have a problem with switching between past and present tense and she believes that I added too much detail, I say this because I want to know if you notice these things.