Talk:Tobit: Theory of Two/@comment-25037895-20150518031010

I lost my edits halfway through because my PC crashed, but I went back and re-did some of them. One thing I wanted to point out though, when you used the word, "domain." I'm not sure that was the right word, I couldn't catch your meaning there. I went back to look for it, couldn't find it, but I'm hoping you know which part I'm talking about.

As for the story as a whole. I thought it was good, a little too much exposition. It seemed to have a certain style where the action would stop suddenly, and a large segment of detailed thoughts where it would actually interrupt the storyline a little bit. I enjoyed a lot of the description in those segments, though, so it is difficult to explain. I don't think anything should be changed, so I digress. Great story overall, less than stellar conclusion.