Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20150918100511/@comment-9041013-20150922213525

Oaura wrote:

BloodySpghetti wrote:

Thanks for pointing out grammatical and spelling issues but as for the plot, your response was kind of hilarious.

You missed the whole point of the story, our "hero" isn't your average murder or even your typical mad human, for two reasons; He's perfectly sane and he's actually a human mutant. Marvel's famous superhuman villain and adventurer Victor Creed aka Sabertooth. Now the reason you did not realize this is either you don't remember the character or you never came close to anything related to X Men which is not the recent movies, the later indicating your childhood sucked or you are too young for this kind of stuff (in my book at least). Also you seemed to be kind of rash and overthinking things as I bluntly put it in the beginning of the piece Victor is an animal, in the literal sense then I further implied this by letting him kill his brother as an animal would using teeth and claws. If that was not enough to point out he's not mere human, I even mentioned his destroyed hand was regenerated (you clearly missed that one too, considering you thought beating him or shooting him would actually permanently damage him).

I've took upon this idea after reading a piece about DC's Joker which everyone is familiar with now thanks to Heath Ledgers remarkable role as the character.

No offense or anything but the points in your review made me finally realize why there is so much horrible content on this site. I'm not saying this piece is that good, I admit I wrote better but it's just hilarious how you and probably several others missed the whole point of the piece by not knowing Sabertooth... Yeah i am ware it limits the audience that would actually enjoy the piece, and Yeah I know not everyone who would know the character actually read the comics but still, it appears people here have no idea in iconic characters like this at all, even though if I somehow manage to write a piece about Wolverine, no one would ever miss the point, if there are any comic fans out here I'm sure they'll like this one :) '... Thanks for pointing out grammatical and spelling errors...'. You're very welcome, I'm always here to help. I do also believe that your story could cater to a niche comic book fan audience that you may find here on Creepypasta Wiki.

As for the rest of your argument: we're going to have some issues. I picked up a bit of aggression in that response, not directed at the review itself but at me as a person (especially in regards to how my childhood 'sucked' [I believe this was a joke?] and how I am 'too young' to be here). I'm all for humour and comedy (I use them in my reviews to soften blows), however, at times your response was more of an attack than a discussion of humour and/or intellect.

'''I will start this response with an apology, for my review (which you may have felt was aggressive towards yourself but was just a standard critique of your work and nowhere did I attack you personally) and for what I am about to do (which is helpful in these cases). My reviews are here to get your story into shape and to help it meet the Quality Standards, not expand your ego. If you have ever been a writer before you would understand exactly what this process is.'''

Do you want to know why I didn't bring up Marvel's Sabertooth in my review (trust me, I was going to and it completely breached my code of practise to leave it out)? It was because I wanted to believe that you had created your own character and it just so happened to share certain aspects of the aforementioned copyrighted character. It's all fine and dandy that you used said character but you hardly put your own spin on it, at all.

As for when you likened him to a beast, I believed you were using a creative use of metaphor (anything to help aid that you were not just copying this character). In fact, that was one of the things I liked about the story. Now you're telling me it was literal, and that is completely all good. A suggestion: make it clearer. As a person who has read your story without [what I believe to be] your own eyes, mind and ego telling you it is the perfect story and knowing exactly what you want to put across, your story was not clear and that is not my fault or the fault of my own respective context.

As per your whole 'mutations and regenerating' argument. Have you read any killer stories? Trust me, they are all alike and follow that exact same plot point: "It's a different story because this character has a mutation in the eyes, has mystical powers bestowed upon them by lord Jeff or Slenderman or Dracula or whatever, can regenerate and dodge bullets with ease, etc.". I'll leave the argument as stands.

As for my final point, here's your quote: '... your review made me realise why there is so much horrible content on this site...'. Mirror Mode, Activate! '...No offence or anything...', but that's interesting because your content is totally better than the likes of Penpal, Funnymouth and 1999. Even the not as creepy content on this Wiki is original and not just 'borrowing' a character from a comic book. And when they do, they have a spin on said character that makes it different to the original. End Mirror of Aggression.

You humoured me, and I enjoyed it. As a helpful piece of advice, your story (when you make it meet the Quality Standards) will need a Spinoff appeal to be placed on the Wiki (or you could just go to Spinpasta Wiki, they're lovely over there).

I was disappointed by the aggression in your response, though I do not blame you; it happens a lot. Your adaption of Marvel's Sabertooth is a great character made into something that could be misconceived as a character from the likes of Jeff the Killer and Clockwork: Your Time is Up, but I know that with a bit more explanation and a bit more clarity you could turn up a good story.

Good luck in your writing adventure!

PS: That smiley face at the end of your response completely changed its meaning and it stares into my soul with unrelenting vigour. :D Oh the so called agression, that's just my way of speaking and writing when communicating with people, I'm straight foreword and sarcastic, Bub.

I still think you did not know who is Victor Creed before reading this and doing some research on the character, which means well, you already know my opinion. Another point that caught my eye is a point where you mention dodging bullets magically, if somehow you were relating this to the plot here, you miss the whole point of "regenerative factor", good God, it's not so complicated.

I never deemed my story perfect, if I did I'd just go and publish it somewhere else without asking for a review and help, not so hard to understand... Jee

While the works you've mentioned are pretty good, they are not the best, usually the obscure ones are better, but that's just me. I advise you to check out "The Night I Met Satan" if you haven't read this one yet

As for spinoffs, I have repeat myself once more, I found a piece here about a guy who's been Jokergased and it's his story of turning into a joker minion in Arkham and basically every reference to anything out of the Batman verse, is down right compied - you've The Joker, who's mentioned as obsessed with Batman, you've Batman who's hardly mentioned and you have a Joker like face all over the god damn thing.

Oh and as for Seriel Killers pieces, I totally agree with you, they all have this weird supernatural thing that shouldn't be there on the contrary however, if you don't make it inhumanly impossible or extremely gory it's not scary or creepy without a side touch, I've actaully tried portraying a real lifelike Psychopath character somewhere else, in hebrew, and while I got good reviews and comments on the plot, the majority stated it's not creepy. So I guess that the least imaginative people go for crazy unnatural things that the Almight Jeffry grants upon those bastards.

And to finish this thing, I wll add a Smile that shall penetrate your soul ;)