User blog comment:Stuckinthe1800s/OF COURSE THEY DID!/@comment-26158797-20150327132926

I can tell that the story was a little rushed, so maybe next time you should think about the story a little longer, write it using a program like Microsoft Word, post it to the Writer's workshop, fix the story, and then post it. As a writer, you may not be able see anything wrong with the story, so you should always have people give you criticism on your story to tell what you need to improve on, that's pretty much the only way you can get better.