Talk:NES Godzilla Creepypasta/Chapter 8: Finale (Part 2)/@comment-26471614-20150606192315

This became poorly written and cliche-ridden in the last chapter. I genuinely wish I had stopped reading after Ch. 7, as 8 was a waste of my time. Beyond how cliche it was, I think the other problems I have with it could've been averted if this ex-girlfriend of his wasn't from middle school..... Maybe a young sister? Or an older girlfriend (i.e. highschool or college and just make Zach an older character)? It's just.... Associating that kind of emotional attachment with a middle school girlfriend is so deliciously naive to myself that it made me roll my eyes reading the line "WE'LL BE TOGETHER AGAIN SOMEDAY." Am I on a dairy farm? Because that's some grade-A cheese!