Talk:Awoken and Possessed/@comment-27123304-20151026211350

I am new to the whole review part but I hope it is helpful at least!

I don't know what your intent was (true posession vs the horror of believing you are posessed and the mental illness aspect that is the stuff of nightmares.) I don't want to assume that it was truly meant to  be a posession (as mental illness IS listed) so I applaud the piece. It is truly frightening and often possession may as well just be a matter of semantics for many who have severe mental illness with pschosis/delusions. The fact that there is not much to be done for these diseases is just scary in itself. 8.9/10

I did want to bring up the thing that had be not certain of how I should approach the story for the review. The story is also categorised under "Beings." As far as I know it applies only to non-imaginary/psycosis induced hallucinated beings within or without. That has me wondering if you DID intend it as true posession. If so as has been mentioned, some fleshing out and going beyond the things that are easily explained by science/psychology would help solidify a case of posession. Different faiths/systems of belief have their own guides to determining if it truly is posession vs. mental illness (I can only spek with more certainty on the Catholic end as it's my faith; determining and then actually agreeing it is possession is complicated and they even have universities/training for it.)

I just wanted to state that because it is a little confusing having the categories seemingly hint at not just mental illness (if the site added entities created by one's own brain it's different and I could see the link. and it's rather chilling.) But anyhow, I'll stop giving advise that you may know of already or isn't pertinent to the story. I will say it again, taking it as mental illness and the horrors that holds is enough. Thanks for the goosebumps.