Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5413761-20150204221140/@comment-5413761-20150215004249

The comment wasnt taken the wrong way at all im glad you could offer some constructive criticism, it helps immensely.

This was mainly an experiment in the idea of something seeming totally innocent becoming twisted but i do see what you mean by your points.

I am not entirely sure though how i would go about explaining the situation without giving too much away in the first paragraph or even to add that suspension into the beggining without losing the innocence

if you have any more pointers i would love to hear them