Talk:Grandpa's Back Room/@comment-6702838-20131216150932

This was pretty lame. It was way too long, with a ton of background that was unnecessary. It focused on boring actions for the majority of the story. The author tried to capture a child's voice, but that effort basically amounted to adding "and stuff" at the end of sentences. That writing style would have been good for this story, but it was disappointingly executed. The story has some potential, but it feels like the author smothered it among poor writing and unimaginative storytelling. 4/10