Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20161117152206/@comment-27838637-20161118042748

Thankyou very much for the review Empy. I have fixed the errors you mentioned, and as foolish as I feel, none of the mechanical errors were intentional. The only intentional badness was the deliberate use of cliches throughout the story. As for the ending, I didn't mean for it to be so clear-cut, and I have edited it a little.

The whole supervisor asking them to go to bed thing was supposed to make you think whether it really was repeating itself, or just a coincidence. Hopefully the way the final part is worded now makes it a little more ambiguous than it originally was.

If you have any more tips I'd be glad to hear them. I am determined to make this work!