Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24077689-20140321204230/@comment-24077689-20140404190448

>Girl falls out of love

>He's bitter. Girl is cheating on him.

>Being haunted by ghost.

>Ghost attacks him.

>Ghost is girl, girl is dead.

>Ghost tormenting, kills himself.


 * 1) didn'tseethatcoming

I mean, I'm failing to see how there's not a story there. I get it, my descriptions get overwhelming, and I really cut them down in this revision. I'm wondering how I could improve the plot progression to make it an actual story. You're saying there's no story here, I'm just wondering how there isn't.