Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20160105003601/@comment-4849011-20160105023058

Am I the first to arrive? Cool.

I loved how you brought up the idea of a dreamer finding an object or physical damage only to brush it aside and have something even more horrible. I also loved the idea of a monster being foiled by a spider and its web.

Here are a couple typos.
 * Trembling, he peered around the dark room, although it was supposed to be a pleasant spell of Indian summer, the air felt strangely cold to chill his limbs and frost his breath.- Trembling, he peered around the dark room. Although it was supposed to be a pleasant spell of Indian summer, the air felt strangely cold to chill his limbs and frost his breath.
 * The captain shook his head as he put out his pipe. “No, he found neither a knife or any bruises or scratches on his ankle...or did he find the ‘monocle’ that granted him clarity to see what truly was there- You forgot the period at the end of the sentence.
 * That was when a pungent, vile odor his his nostrils, almost causing him to gag and retch.- That was when a pungent, vile odor hit his nostrils, almost causing him to gag and retch.