Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24191206-20140410182103/@comment-24841494-20140411194815

This needs a LOT more build up. I would do a complete rewrite, and have the guy being trapped inside of the house for weeks by the monster so he can't escape. Slowly have the character build up courage to leave and face the monster. Also, don't have him not leave "because he was scared" that is not a very plausible reason. Have him atempt to escape several times, and not be able to, do to the creature sulking the outside of the house. maybe the monster wants to keep the protaganist inside for some reason?