Talk:Birthday Clown/@comment-26844173-20150819074610

To be honest, after the clown cut his face off, I kind of got lost. Why would the police ignore this? What was the point of saying he made a mistake, enjoy his life? It feels like you just rushed to get to the gory bit but ran out of steam for the post gore explanations. To be honest, if you had stopped just before "All the kids, even our Mikey" and just tacked on the last line, it would have been better than with the last few paragraphs. Otherwise, it wasn't a bad story. Keep writing!