Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190813084030/@comment-5733573-20190813155659

DrBobSmith wrote: Thank you both for your reviews. They were very helpful.

Ready - no. It's not. I took it as far as I could, but I could feel that it will take a couple of more drafts to develop it sufficiently. I'm figuring it will be around the first of the month before this story is ready to post. I think it's better than your response implies. All it really needs is some tuning followed by a surface level edit of the mechanics.

One thing I forgot to mention: I don't think it's necessary to include Rev. 14:4 - 5 as 1 - 3 are totally enough for your purposes. I understand what you're going for here, but it doesn't quite add as much as it needs to in order for that to be effective.