Talk:Peace/@comment-25714052-20141119231638/@comment-28032069-20160504233650

It's very good. Also, if the capitalized H in Her was meant to be that way to show Godlike (capitalized Godlike because it's only used in a supreme all powerful God, not minor gods) power, it should be that way in every applicable instance, and so should the S in She. That's not a huge error, I only caught it because I have to catch myself on proper writing techniques with divinities or Divinity because I work with it often, either as a basis for a story or as simply a way of expressing the thoughts of a mentally disturbed individual in one. I love it, it's an incredible concept and a beautiful (almost poetic, in fact) description. It combines a supernatural concept and scientific ends to the universe, with a clear physical connector to the two. Her actions seemed to flow as one with the scientific collapse rather than immediately before it due to your pattern of italicization, which also made it easier to track. Beautiful writing, you have a true gift, and I would love to read more of your works. Not necessarily as macabre as other creepypasta, but still creepy in its own light that I don't think I necessarily have the words for.