Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26705150-20160127065734/@comment-27675561-20160128175728

The beginning was good, I would try to tie more solid facts that fog appears whenever a masked man appears in a city. And then mention not long ago that they attacked the current city where the story takes place.

I think I'm referring more towards late middle to ending.

I can't tell you how to write your own story, but my idea on how I would compose it is to have the same tone you do at the beginning, but then slowly draw out more chaotic and crazy, unnatural events as it progresses. Things that defy physics and reality, so it's just more obvious that he's slowly being influenced by the fog. Or maybe in the midst of chaos, he here's an echo of one of his watch compainions shout "Get out of the fog!" and then the main character acts like he just doens't get it because his surroundings seem like there isn't fog, but in actuallity the reader knows he's in there because there's no way these events are happening. The main character, though- like with everyone, their perception is their own reality- This main guy thinks it's real. If people could tell they were under fog influence, then the fog wouldn't have a purpose. Everyone would escape it, if that were the case.