Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190702085504/@comment-7673575-20190706121621

Not much to said that hasn't already been said, but still a bit left.

I have a feeling like there are massive parts of the story missing. The ease with which Hermann fell into a trap seems a bit odd. The "stalking" part is fairly non-existent, and the depiction of the Rusalka (for the lack of better term) isn't really as monstrous.

Dialogue is in places a bit anachronistic, and a bit crude in some places. A bit of a brow tilter, really.

Maybe it's just my penchant for longer pieces, but, as I said, it feels like a lot was left unsaid.