Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26893881-20150804114957/@comment-26475253-20150804180512

Alright. Let's review, shall we?

There are a good many errors in wording, spacing, etc. Here are some examples: I really like the house, but ever since moving in my 8 year old son has been acting really strange lately. You don't need the word lately, as it is essentially the same thing as ever since moving in. I then decided to go the main library and look through archives and after an hour of searching I found som

ething chilling I don't understand why you put huge spaces in between "som" and "ething", but it's bothering my eyes. and I was playing as my favourite team West Bromwich Albion battling for the First off, favorite is spelled wrong. But I also notice that this sentence adds nothing to the story and is void of the commas it oh-so desperately needs.

There are more, but I just woke up from a much needed sleep. I suggest retrying on all this, and perhaps achieving a more original idea.