Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20151026183659/@comment-27012445-20151026213659

thank you for the valuable feedback. I think I can polish it up nicely now. It's interesting you mentioned the under-developed feel of the story. The story I intended to tell was much different and disturbing and this only intended to be part of character development. As I wrote this, I really got attached to the character and couldn't bring myself to have his fate end up as the initial plot required. Thank you for being so supportive in your feedback. This was a risky one for me that could have easily gone horribly wrong and a source of ridicule. I was laughing when I wrote it, and it is awesome to know that at least one other person did as well.