Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27123040-20151208155021/@comment-26007602-20151208221421

The concept is nice, the idea of a physical soul opens up a lot of possibilities, but there's notice beyond that. I'm interested to see where this goes, provided it is expanded on further. I think you should do a but more to distinguish the character here, as he is basically nobody right now, with little personality. Seeig as this is the first entry, the reader usually expects a bit more about the writer of the journal. You might want to time down the insanity aspect a bit too, as it's a little strong and heavy handed here.