Talk:Stitchy/@comment-25052433-20141010170338

Not really sure about this one. Your grammar was done well and I found very few errors. Still, it feels lacking. Let's see if we can break it down a bit.

-Your basic concept is solid and is based off a fairly time tested and successful formula. Kids go into dark woods at night. Stalked and killed by unknown entity. That is a very safe concept for a scary story and one that won't really fail you. All of that is fine, but then....

-Stitchy. I mean, okay, his name isn't exactly going to strike terror on first sight, but that isn't really an issue. I mean, the names Freddy and Jason aren't exactly scary on their own, but when you attach those names to psychos that live in your dreams or hunt you at camp in a hockey mask, well, they become classics. The Stitchy name alone isn't even that bad. It's catchy. People will remember that. He could become a cool OC. But then....

-He wore a hoodie and had no eyes. Why? First of all, why put him in a hooded shirt. That is cliché around these parts and as soon as I saw that term, hoodie, I knew this one was going down and fast. Then he has no eyes. The only way this guy could be more cliché is if you would have managed to use the term 'hyper-realistic' somehow.

-This last piece isn't really a technical error, just one of my own pet peeves. I am not a big fan of Creepypasta being referenced in a Creepypasta. Not sure why, it just seems to cheapen the whole encounter.

-During the ending author notes, you explained the fate of your protagonist. Not a good method. Your story should have zipped up any and all questions as to her fate. Or, if you were intentionally going for a cliff hanger ending where her fate is left unknown, that is fine too. But explaining it to us at the end, it just takes all the mystery and realism from the story, and really hammers home the fact that it is just a story that can be narrated away at the end.

My closing thoughts on this one are simple. Drop the similarities between Stitchy and so many other CP villains. Otherwise, this isn't a terrible story and I could see your OC becoming popular. Best of luck.