Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33539696-20171104005058/@comment-33531395-20171104170101

From what I read, this is merely just a take on side characters. No real creepy message can be taken out of it. The wording is phenomenal and structurization is good. However, it seems that you picked a rather bland subject to make creepy. It felt a bit pointless to read since people already know about what you described in the story Not to mention that the ending is very anticlimactic and a bit underwhelming.

I suggest revising this story to have more character and not to end so suddenly. Other than that you seem to have a good grasp on the english language.