Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35353892-20180423020816/@comment-35353892-20180424001403

Thank you for the feedback! I agree with most of your criticisms, the story itself could have been more fleshed out but I intended to keep it on the shorter side. However, I think there is a slight misunderstanding about how the story ends. My original vision was that the creature took the form of a member of the base in order to send the alarm, but with the lack of detail I can see how that may be unclear. If I ever get around to making this a full fledged pasta, I will elaborate on that and also add more realism to the time cycle as you recommended. Thank you again for your feedback.