Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-23872426-20170416052943/@comment-31751868-20170417060535

This is a pretty good creepypasta. You built up a good bit of tension, at the very least enough to keep me interested. The main character and Stan were a bit lacking in personality and description, but you made up for this by furthering the plot, so it's at least worth something. The girl was the focus point out of the three of them, and you did a good job with her description and a fair job with her personality.

My only real problem is with the plot twist. Granted, I was not expecting anything close to it, so good job with that, but I have read one or two stories like it, and to me personally, it's not much of a scare. I'm sure to some others it will be unsettling if you published it, but this just doesn't do it for me. Regardless though, everything combined makes this story pretty good; I'd personally give it a 7.5 to an 8 out of 10.