Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20180720101448/@comment-28428152-20180721015003

DrBobSmith wrote:

While experiencing death as the person dying could have a dimension of horror, being a person who is alone and very quickly dying leaves nobody to relate the story of these thoughts. I had a draft of story where the POV protagonist died in Writer's Workshop. People criticized there being no way for the story to be related. Reddit requires there to be someone to relate the story. I would disagree about the story requiring a source of relation, as the purpose of a story doesn't always have to be to make it absolutely 100% possible to have taken place, as is the purpose of NoSleep, where the purpose is stated to make it so that it could have actually happened. But yes, very little creepiness or horror, unless you count simply dying or bleeding as creepy.

And I thought that perhaps the perception of multiple selves was possibly due to delusion resulting from blood loss. But there simply isn't enough to make this belong on creepypasta. I did a somewhat similar story in which the protagonist is bleeding out in a swamp, and in which I did incorporate symptoms of blood-loss, but to make it creepy I added the backstory as well as emotional horror, as the protagonist is seeing dead people and serial killers are involved. My suggestion would be to do what I did: add some context that would help qualify this as horror, or make it at least dark enough to belong (it doesn't have to be outright horror). I'd also go into further detail as to what exactly the other selves are, as you want themes and messages to be clear in a story (otherwise, why write it?).