Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25226524-20141006023230/@comment-24101790-20141006030551

I enjoyed the story, a little ambivalent on the ending. You could flesh it out a little more with the role reversal. (Honestly though, I can't really think of any helpful suggestions on how to improve it.)

Minor grammatical issue: "hulks nipple" is missing an apostrophe (Possession). Other than that, I didn't spot any other errors. (Good job!) Also enjoyed the accents/colloquialisms.

All in all, the story meets quality standards and is well-written, but the ending could use a little revision. Wish I could be a little more but I'm a bit out of my element with this genre/type of story