Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20150201125302/@comment-28938497-20150201143549

A lot of these are simple errors that I can fix when I put it up. (this is only the first draft, after all)

Bigger changes, however, I'm not as comfortable making, so I might run them by you to see if these are any good;

-The staredown is broken by the crow attacking the narrator, instead of the narrator simply running away.

-The window was open the whole time he was on the computer.