Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26112985-20150720213348/@comment-26193563-20150721231228

Really nice story, you had me tuned the whole way, but I have to say this: the ending was unexpected.

And, er, not really a great way.

Before I mention the cons, I'll tell you that this is really nice, proper amount of background, suspense (maybe a bit more detail?), simply "spiffy."

But there were absolutely no clues leading up to the father being the killer. The thing about twist endings is that there is always at least one small, little clue, that sharp readers (not me, lol) can hang onto. Here, however, there wasn't anything.

If you could possibly slip in a small detail (I'm sure you could, being such a talented writer) that indicates what the story is leading up to? Not just spinning out stuff out of the blue.