Talk:Looking for an Exit/@comment-27905100-20170213040133

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I forgot to review this. Shit.

Sorrysorrysorrysorrysorry.

Okay, here we go.

Certain parts of this seem just too... prosey, I guess (namely the exposition). Don't get me wrong, it's not a big deal, but the language you use seems almost out of place. That's just me being kind of nit-picky.

Now, this is pretty funny at the end, but it was a strange mix of lightheartedness and darkness throughout the rest. The story had a good plotline, though, so that helped quite a bit with the issues, and I'm willing to overlook them to read this genuinely entertaining story.

I rate this: