Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180714064900/@comment-35711173-20180716071136

Kolpic,

Jdeschene is correct in her review. Let me attempt to give you some tools to help you correct your mistakes.


 * https://www.scribens.com/index.html contains good detection for run-on sentences.
 * https://prowritingaid.com detects many issues but unfortunately the free version only let you work with 500 words at a time. Your story is 1,401 words but that's not an issue. I just analyze a few paragraphs at a time.

You need to learn how to edit. Very often the sentences with the most problems really are the least necessary. As you proceed, try reading the paragraph without the problems. If the story remains intact then leave it out.