Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26118346-20150613161226/@comment-26007602-20150613175954

First off, there are a ton of grammatical errors here, so many that I can't list them all. Read this story out loud to find which sentences don't make sense or are awkwardly written.

Your use of Slenderman in the story will warrant it's instant deletion because of the blacklist. Your story is also highly cliched as well and follows the standard OC formula of kid is bullied, kid harms/disfigured self, kid wreaks havoc as a killer. Peters character has been done to death and just isn't original, creepy, or interesting to read about. Read this if you want to know the precise reasons why your story arc won't be accepted here.

There are other issues with the story as well. The bullies are cartoonish it evil and only there for the sake of being evil; try aren't believable characters in the least. The fact that Peter kills himself and everyone just believes it was a suicide is utterly ridiculous as well. Slenderman (or "the creepy figure") shows up out of nowhere; there's no build up or reason for him to be in this story.

Between the high amount of grammatical errors, the blacklisted content, and the clichéd storyline, this story would need a complete rewrite to pass the quality standards here. Personally, I would scrap the story and move on to better projects. Best of luck in whatever you decide.