Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37090617-20181003215425/@comment-35711173-20181003224537

Hi,

Your use of present tense rather than past tense stands out for violating conventions but I don't see it as a deal killer. I have seen a LOT worse use of English. Thank you for making the effort there.

I don't feel originality. It's another story about some kids and a haunted video game. I would ask an Admin to review the plot before posting it or it may well get deleted just because of that.

Where do you live (State/country would be enough.) It feels like an urban area in the USA, but I could be wrong. Dig deep into your own life for unique and different tales of horror. Four of my creepypastas were based on personal experiences. Do you have family history involving death, murder or other such horror? Is there a decaying crack house that your parents say to stay away from? How about legends told in the family, perhaps from the old country, perhaps from crazy Grandpa. Have you ever almost been killed. I have, and it is the basis of one of my creepypastas.