Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20190508225431/@comment-9041013-20190510201733

Well Im not a fan of this overly colorful high speed plot you've come up with here but it works way better than the previous version, in my humble. If I had to write something like that, which I kind of did, I'd go for 8 - 10 thousand words and beyond, flash out as much as I can and build and construct a whole world around the plot.

Way for more opinions, I say.

I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be my "consciousness was semi intact" not "my conscious"

Oh and as for the naming, for a fancier acting cultists, use a name from some none Christian faith for Hell for the harder drug. Maybe Sheol or Mictlan or something.