Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24169760-20171229214014

Ok so I wrote this on the Creepypasta.com site so tell me what you think.

Jack the stalker had a rough life he has red eyes with dark pupils and he was 14 years of age he also had long dark hair he was 112.0 lb (50.8 kg). Jack's father's name is Jon Michael and her mother's name is Joel Louis  His family was always going to activities without Jack. They also screamed at Jack when he made a mess or when he didn't listen to his parents. but they're  relationship became wors When Jon Started to call his son names such as Stupid, Dumb, and multiple F-words.

Before Jon became angry and cruel he used to go to a church to preach god but he was lying all along. He instead went to a shady group under a Bridge serving a fake god which resembled a golden goat the group would do sacrifices to please this fake god. all the members surrounded Jon and the boss of the group approached him and said.

Jon from now on you will do as we say or you will be kidnaped by us understood!

Jon replies with yes and he listens.

Your family must be badly treated as you are their boss, Don't let them make you their slave!

Now Jon keeps Harassing and Bullying his son because he thinks he is his slave then his father started to be mean with Joel which ended up in the separation of Jon and Joel. Jack has never had the chance to meet Joel again.

Jon kept harassing his son and forced him to give him certain things and do certain things for him.

But Jack had enough of this unfair slavery and he started to remember his rough past and he had nightmares that kept replaying his past. this is when he snapped as he became an adult of 25 years old he is 5 foot 10 inches tall. he wanted the last laugh and he got it the hard way.

he started by stalking his father all day. even when he went with the satanic group he understood that he was forced to be mean to his family but he didn't care about the satanic group because it's his father that decided to do all these horrible things. as he listened to the group they asked Jon for his worst nightmare and Jon said that his worst nightmare was Drowning. Jack finally had what he wanted a walked silently back home with a large psychotic smile.

When Jon returns home he sees Jack staring at their pool. approaches the Jack Turns around fast and grabs his father's torso and puts him on the ground and his face is submerged underwater. now Jack is holding his father's hands and his head. his father panics and finally drowns. as Jack laughs and hides the body in a dumpster.

He was recently found in a mental asylum handcuffed and kept in a prison cell but he has not been given the electric chair. some say that he escaped by pickpocketing a guars key next to his cell and escaped at midnight and he tore the handcuffs apart with a knife in the kitchen of the asylum.  