Talk:Clockwork/@comment-33636966-20171113064043

Very well put together. Love how you pulled the emotional and physical horror out of the situation. quick tip, though, try to capture more of the horror part of it; im reading this in a dark house alone and could almost fall asleep reading this, bring more suspense! Try using sound effects of the chains, sentences like “tick, tock, clink, clank” or something like that. Just the sound effects alone will help bring out the horror of a story, as it forces the reader to listen to their own surroundings and pick out the rhythmic, constant, censistent sounds of their own environment. You have potential, keep it up!