Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27594923-20160112134851/@comment-4715955-20160115022930

This also isn't even a story. It's more like an outline for a story, and not a very good one at that. "There's a bad thing that happened. When did it happen? RIGHT NOW! LOOK OUT LOL!"

Read less creepypasta and read more proper books. That's the only way to learn how to write.