Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20171214221911/@comment-7673575-20171215003319

It's a solid story: a for me previously unseen take on a "killer in a home" template.

But there are a few faults.

First and foremost, how did Santa get in the house?

Second; what is the reason for the plot? Why did Santa kill the parents but spare the kid? Why did he leave the presents for her? What are his motives?

Third: even a kid of young age (I guess she's 5-7) would notice bloody sheets and the fact that her parents are friggin dead. A stab in the neck genetares more blood than a stab to most other parts of body. Their bedroom should look a horse's nosebleed.

Fourth: is Santa a someone or something?

There are also several G-errors/Typos, as well as occasional double spacing.