Talk:Caffeine/@comment-25941663-20150429224236

This was a weirdly disturbing read. I loved how the narrator spiralled into madness.

One of the issues I noticed is that you mixed up "its" and "it's" quite often. Also, in the first paragraph you wrote "in the middle of night" twice in quick succession. Considering changing it up a bit up there.

Overall, though, this was a nice read for a short story. Well done.