Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28266772-20160707162915/@comment-28266772-20160714145655

Thank you very much for the feedback! It's very helpful with letting me know how to structure the introductory letter. I think the birth certificate will be clearer, and I'll shorten the last line to just "Please reconsider" which was something I considered doing before changing it to include Michael's name.

And I'm struggling to come up with a reason for why the woman would forward this letter to her brother without having read it. I don't think it's that strange given just how weird most people are anyway, but I'd still rather find a more compelling reason if I could just think of one. Perhaps something like,

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I thought I would let you know that I’ve been at Mum’s the past few weeks sorting through everything. I wanted to apologize for not saying anything at the funeral. I didn't think David should have said what he did, but you've got to understand that he's the youngest and it's been very hard on him. You always were the favourite, and the rest of us couldn't help but be a bit jealous.

But it still wasn't fair for me to just stand back and let him go at you like that. And I wanted you to know that I'd like to try and fix things between us. So I thought I’d pass this onto you, as just a little peace offering. As far as I can tell it's just your birth certificate, although there's some weird letter slipped into the envelope with it too. You can probably just throw that away, but I thought you'd at least appreciate having your birth certificate somewhere safe and sound where you can find it easily.

Let me know how things are going out there in Asia, okay?

With love from your sister,

Sarah Nettleworth