Talk:Nightlights/@comment-24304936-20140324150752

I kind of liked it.

I won't dissect it, since Shawn did a pretty comprehensive job already; some of the points he made were valid, but others a bit too much. For example, "How big is the bed?" Who cares. The reader has an imagination. Don't let stuff like that bother you.

There were some light editing issues I spotted, but nothing too huge that would warrant it being deleted. By me anyway. I also think this is fine as it is as a standalone story. I don't think a series would really do it justice. Just my two pennies.