Talk:Silent Spring/@comment-25569708-20180709065530

Hmm, this is the first story I've read here in a while that made me pretty uncomfortable. I don't know what it is, but something about the clinical; detached storytelling and vague suspense you kept up til the end really interested and unnerved me. A big part of it was how short the notice from the Commander was and how understated the whole twist is. It's not like I'm particularly frightened of cryptids or birds (quite the contrary), but you made it very believable and as a result I got sucked into the story. Since you seem to be very informed about avian behavior it made the pasta feel legitimate and grounded in reality. Nicely done.