Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25830893-20141208005456/@comment-25830892-20141208010937

This has a lot of potential! It kind of sounds like you didn't edit it very much, but it could be great if you did! My advice would be, write the pasta, then let it sit a day or two. Then come back to it and read it over a few times, fixing mistakes you find along the way. Another thing you could do to make sure it flows smoothly is get someone else to read it (a friend or someone with writing experience, or a high reading level.  They will be able to point out certain mistakes that you make, like using the word 'udder' instead of 'utter'.) and tell you what you can do to improve it.

It's a good slasher, though :)