Talk:Hello, Sinner/@comment-25458443-20160523221002

Ooh, this is very good!

I think the line "I needed to feel something about this. " is my favorite line, it feels real and that's what it's like when something devatating happens to you. The "twist" is less like a twist and more like the story continuing in a way you don't expect, but it's really chilling and well executed. It's important and interesting how realistic the opening is, but I'll admit that him reading Christian's journal just imediantly like that kind of strikes me as weird...