Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29275171-20181111051520/@comment-9041013-20181111195357

NedWolfkin wrote: Galaxilord1954 EX wrote:

I know this is a lot of context not said within the story, and that could be attributed to laziness, but at the same time, I was largely unaware of how to properly integrate that into the plot from Simon's pov. When writing a story it is usually best to at least put a little bit of context in it.

Galaxilord1954 EX wrote:

As for the flood, it is largely Simon's fault as to why these floods are occurring, his brutality and tyranny are what results in the flood's beginnings. Rather than Noah's situation, however, the world is at this point an armageddon. God then sent this flood to start the Earth a new. I know that Simon is responsible. God promised no more earth destroying floods, '''period. '''

Genesis 9:11 (KJV) "And I will establish my covenant with you; neither shall all flesh be cut off any more by the waters of a flood; neither shall there any more be a flood to destroy the earth."

That doesn't just mean He won't send another, that means there won't be another regardless of its origins.

Galaxilord1954 EX wrote:

But thank you very much for the feedback, every bit helps, please let me know if there's anything else. You're welcome. I wish you better luck on your next story. God also threatened to kill Adam and Eve if they ate from the fruits of the tree of knowledge and we ended up having a nearly thousand year old Adam, after he ate the damned thing. Not a very reliable deity.

Anyway, as for the story, it kind of lacks context mainly. Throw in a bunch of megalomaniacal monologue that explains the current situation. Make him seem more like a bit of Nero and Hitler, completely proud of how he destroyed the world. Give him a touch of Idi Amin something along the lines of going on about how he is the king emperor intergalactic ruler of the milky way galaxy his majesty Shahanshah khagan of the Planet Terra Simon Tyran etc etc.

Make him completely bonkers that still makes a bit of sense and captivates people.

Then of course you could tie in the whole "I am greater than God" thing.

Also, try to imply some natural disaster causing the crazy downpoor, or perhaps make it a post apocalyptic world where small parts of the world are disconnected and each leader thinks of himself as bigger than he actually is. How does this tie in? another local "apocalypse" hit Tyran's region.