Talk:Teeth.jpg/@comment-25700360-20141116210613

This was kind of disappointing for me, especially as a PotM.

Biggest area for improvement: the climactic "reveal" at the end of the story, where we find out what happened to lilly, was already shown by a photograph and described by the author at the very start of the story! There isn't any surprise. It's just "Lilly has gone missing and we have strong photographic evidence that Daniel has disfigured her mouth and it turns out that's exactly what happened."