Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20181027120725/@comment-9041013-20181027164845

L0CKED334 wrote: Ok, I really enjoyed your description here. It really paints a picture with words. I do have issue with a couple of things and maybe you can clear them up for me.

1) I thought an Obelisk was like a pillar or something, I don't quite get the name considering it's a mask that transports someone to a place of torture.

2) How does this random girl know what is going on when the shopkeeper has no clue?

3) If you were looking for scary Halloween decorations why go to an antique shop? I mean, maybe antique shops are different where you are but I have never seen anything particularly "creepy" in one here. I guess it depends on the wares. The thing that made the character go loopy was a small statue, not the mask. ​​RIP.

1. The name is a reference to Yugioh, "Obelisk The Tormentor" monster card, I couldn't come up with a different name and I did not want to throw out "Chekatonkheir" which is essentially what this creature is.

2. The girl is a reference to a character I used in another story, how does she know stuff? "Magic" She doesn't really have a point in the story other than just me wanting to reference her, I'll probably get rid of that last paragraph when I post this on the main site.

3. He was looking for creepy'ish stuff, like Kongolese Masks, possibly old stuffed animals, maybe some really old broken down toys or ritualistic figurines... Ever seen what Mesopotamian idols look like? Not very pleasant. Stuff like that.

Thanks for taking your time to review this :p