Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28266772-20160729155428/@comment-28266772-20160804092514

Hey,

thank you so much for the feedback Frank! I'll clearly need to try and clarify things a bit more. The general jist is this group of witches are looking for Annabelle because she was one of them, and they look after their own. Ian is along because he's to be used as bait because they have a good idea that Annabelle might be something worse than human. Of course Ian just thinks he's there to offer her help...

I'll try to clarify the relationship between Ian, the company, and the woman. Your advice has been super helpful though as I had some concerns that the connection between the two parts wasn't very clear.