Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33696343-20181115144801/@comment-33696343-20181115233207

NedWolfkin wrote: DrBobSmith wrote: That wall of text paragraph starting with "The fourth road" is unreadable. Here's a break-down.

The fourth road was just like the third road, with no clouds, no stars, and no moon. Trees started to appear, but there were no leaves and there was no grass. This was theorized to be that if this occurs, you are about to die. that has been proven false since its seen whenever you reach this road. Then, my car turned off itself and it got cold real quick. It wouldn't start up at al for the past 6 minutes. those figures were surrounding me again. I can sense it.

After 6 minutes, my car finally started up and I dove as fast as I could. For some reason, the road seemed never-ending, like a long highway of some sort. But nothing happened throughout the rest of the road. So that was at least enough time to regain my sanity.

The fifth road was where it started to tease me. It made fun of my family members who had mental and health problems. Then, they set my car on fire and it burned pretty quick. The road was also kinda quick and somehow, my car was still in one piece and I left. 2 more to go.

The sixth road was now like a torture chamber, only worse. Driving down the road, there were limbs and dead corpses of the people who failed to finish. I vomited. My vomit had blood within it and I was about to quit. But if I had quit, I would die. So I continued. I had to sit and watch a hallucination of my parents being whipped and even worse, being raped. I was yelling at the top of my lungs to stop. But they didn't listen and kept on toying with my mind. Then the same demonic voice came back and told me:"If you move, you'll join them.". I didn't want to join them, although they were my family.

I was finally able to leave that hellhole and get to the last road. Finally, the last road. Out of all the things i've been through on my journey, that is now all combined into one. I saw a red light on the horizon, thinking it was a service tower. My car was almost on the E. It was pure hell of what I was about to experience.

The red light pulled me towards it and I had to close my eyes in order for me to not die. I heard high pitched screams of pain, and felt my skin getting burned off as well as my car being burned. After I made it out, I had to regain my sanity once again. The demonic voice came back and told me: "Thanks for coming. Your lucky you made it out alive." I ended back up to where I started and the stars, the clouds and the moon came back and I heard the busy highway again.

I earned some kind of item that I was not expecting to earn. I could feel it. I looked in my trunk and saw a duffel bag. That wasn't there before. I looked in it, and there was loot in the bag. Around 90K was in there. I was happy with my prize. So after that, I went back home and was very sleepy, so I slept, and it was one of the best nights of sleep i've ever had. Thanks, I might just use that for my story.