Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20181115065841/@comment-9041013-20181116195844

DrBobSmith wrote: The guy's wife cheated on him and he didn't sire his daughter. It sucks but it happens. So why is he taking it out on his daughter? I hate to say it, I feel pissed at the guy. Some of her genes coming from someone else isn't her fault. She didn't do it.

It's a fantasy trip, but I can't see someone losing it mentally for a long period over an animal attack. OK, it's a mess. You call the insurance company and you get it resolved.

It comes off as a "I hate my Vegan relative" story. Maybe that's the intention.

Coyotes aren't pack animals.

I don't see the reason for the title change. I don't like the title and think you can do MUCH better, but having another story being 50% of the title for yours is coincidence, especially when the stories are so different. In regards to the father throwing it all at his daughter, this is what normal people do, they don't throw their anger wherever they can. They rather project their own problems than to admit them, because admitting one's problems means their self image is flawed which hurts on a psychological level.

As for the story, its clunky in various places plot-wise because Coyotes are about the size of a middle sized domestic dog. They aren't exactly the most terrifying creature. It's the America's Jackal, it's like a minisized wolf. Kicking it a few times in the head will make it run away.

Also Coyotes aren't exactly pack animals, and their "units" are no as orginized as a Wolf pack. Also if it's an attack on a house, a Wolf pack would have a rather small advantage with their hunting tactics which are similar to our own - tire the pray to death or near death and then eat it.

If you were talking about a camping trip or something, sure, but I doubt that even Coydogs (which are a vicious type of Coyote - Domestic hound - wolf hybrid) are daring enough to break into a house. These aren't the monkeys of India.

More importantly, why after the second or third heart attack wasn't he given a strict new diet, medicine or even a heart transplant?

Weird little things like this make me think that this ain't it.