Talk:Demitri's Journal/@comment-5733573-20180512173939

This story is very interesting. I wouldn't call it scary, but definitly disturbing. I think my favorite part is the entry where Dimitri describes the other scientists who are trapped with him. That was very powerful.

There were a lot of sentence structure issues, particularly comma splices, which made this hard to read at times. I think you should review what a comma splice is an how to avoid them.

Otherwise, I found this one to be pretty enjoyable. Nice work!