Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25410053-20140911223855/@comment-24841732-20140912133611

The story is frankly, well, bad. Grammar and spelling is all but ignored, you didn't use quotation marks for dialogue, and there is not even a sign of a coherrent plot.

What you did wrong:

- Spelling and grammar errors throughout.

- Cliche (Overused) plot.

- Unrealistic characters. How does he know his grandfather is trying to kill him?

What you can do:

- Spell and grammar check. Make sure the story is readable

- Avoid cliches. Read lots of creepypastas, and find what's overdone. Try to be original.

- Try to make your characters realistic. How would you act in the situation?

You seem a little young, which is why I'm not tearing you a new one. If you want to write, good on you. Pay attention in english class. Read a lot. And most importantly, don't stop writing.