User blog comment:ImGonnaBeThatGuy/Passive Storytelling: Your Worst Enemy/@comment-3999760-20141010040256

You are dead on here. When stories are written like this it demotes and dilutes the theme and tone that the author is trying convey. It makes the story seem boring and disconnecting because the writing is not even trying to captivate your attention. It unfortunately it makes everything dull and generic to the point the reader starts to become apathetic to what is going on in the story, thus taking away any horror or creepyness.

In the end, it all comes down to showing, not telling.