Talk:The Slenderman Cometh/@comment-31084867-20170217191439

I don't want to spend to much time tearing this story apart. So I'll keep it brief. This story is way to played out. Everything happend because it just had to. Steven works at a cemetary at night even though he said that he would never go there at night. It just so happens that he is friends with someone that knows quite a bit about Slenderman that he is able to identify him from the simple description of "He was really tall with a nice suit on. It was too dark, so I couldn't see his face." As if Slenderman is the only answer for that vegue description. But it also just so happens that Jeff knows someone who knows a lot about Slenderman. Even though there isn't much to tell. They basically use the internet legend in world. But what makes it worse is that they use the woodcuts by Hans. Which I actually did some research on and his name is actually Hans Holbein, not Freckenberg, which is spelled wrong. And doing a little bit of searching, you can find that the ones that depict Slenderman are actually fake. And also the fakes don't display a creature that looks unlike Slenderman. They are honestly very different. And after being informed about all this stuff, what does Steven do? He believes it fully without a doubt, and ends up waiting in the cemetary for Slenderman. But not only does he survive, it just so happens that both Jeff and James happen to be there for no reason at all. So in the end, I will say this. The plot is so minimal that it's sad. Things happen for no reason at all aside from propelling the plot. The fact that Slenderman is so well knownig, the fact that it is treated as both real and yet fake considering people don't really know about it is way to contradictory. And especially since everything taken way to casually makes no sense at all. In the end, I'll give this a 3/10.