Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20161101085537/@comment-31532017-20161103033040

ChristianWallis wrote: Looking at this the basic gist of it is that the hook just doesn't work. It's a nice exercise but it's too easy to explain the twist away. It's just not scary enough. First thing I thought? A gust of wind shut the door. Another problem is that you establish that you live alone after the initial twist. You should establish the rules before you break them i.e 'the door cannot be shut by anyone other than me, ergo when the door is shut by not me, it means there is someone else in the house'. Not 'the door is shut, but it couldn't have been shut by anyone other than me. There must be someone else in the house'. But I found a away to expand the story a lot more to make it more frightening and remove the gust of wind problem. Either way, thanks for the feedback.