Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24248644-20150101204426/@comment-25500640-20150101215517

well this has many of the right aspects of a good story but there is very little build up and it doesn't last very long, it goes straight to the horror part of it, and while it is a gruesome Idea it won't scare people if you put it like that. the anonymous elisa Goodwin is a good aspect but it is also unrealistic with the whole "person who is telling the story dies" aspect.