Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25940466-20141230030653/@comment-25940466-20141230053304

I wrote this for my friend Kailee, who is scared to death of moths and clowns. I had the thought to put it on here just to see what other people's opinions were on it, so I could make it even scarier for her. Also, I am a grammar nazi and noticed how many times I used the wrong "its" or "it's" But haven't bothered to correct them quite yet. I also realized that I should add some things to it to clarify why Amber didn't hear Kailee, but I figured to change that in the morning when I wasn't getting distracted by dogs.

But Amber can't hear the giggling, only Kailee can. Also, I had Amber mention mulitple times that Kailee was probably dreaming, meaning Kailee did eventually fall asleep. I had the thought of adding Amber's perspective of where it's the morning and Kailee isn't waking up yet in reality, she's covered in the ash of the dead moths and her face is bleeding where the clown had bit her in her dream. More things I have yet to add I'm afraid and will do so in the morning.