Talk:Fungus Among Us/@comment-25226524-20160407234554/@comment-25226524-20160408145856

You're always improving, so just keep at it. I want to clarify that minor details are a good thing, but only when they're relevant. If I said, "I got a new tattoo on my left shoulder," then "left" is relevant, but if I say, "I grabbed the handle with my right hand," the word "right" and even "hand" may not be necessary except in special circumstances. In a way, less can be more, but it's more about making the most out of the words you use. Make sure that they're completely necessary; that's really the key. If you can take words out of a sentence and it still makes sense and has the same impact, then leave them out. It takes a while to get the hang of what is and isn't necessary, but if you study other authors and read what you write out loud, you'll start picking it up. I'll try to give one of your other new stories a read soon.