Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25074573-20140617171529/@comment-25074573-20140620010105

Wow! :D

Thank you for The help and the editing. Included your improvements into the story. Im still working on it. After I thought there was no feedback coming I tried to upload it and it was promptly removed. Ill keep rereading it and rework a certain unnecessary parts (especially in the beginning) until its ready to be published.