Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37708694-20181205182102/@comment-36627132-20181206045329

DrBobSmith wrote: Ouitalkcreepy,

If you would be so kind, let's play a bit of imagination here.

What if the protagonist's parents were filthy rich from computer software? Like Bill Gates. Or e-commerce like Jeff Bezos of Amazon? Not much. They're still multi-billionaires. Those are much more believable ways of having enough money to be able to kill people for fun. By switching sources of wealth, a peripheral background detail, you avoid the reader questioning a technical reality.

Likewise, what does the protagonist being THAT talented add to the story? It distracts from the story. We are stuck thinking that this is an ultra-perfect Mary Sue fantasy and really don't care what she feels. We would empathize more with someone as human and imperfect as we are.

Think about it.

Dr. Bob As I was reading this I just thought of something. If her parents discovered a cure for cancer and are philantrophistic, then why are they involved in killing people? I'm assuming it is just a way to surprise the readers.