Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32864316-20170815172509/@comment-32864316-20180827203121

DrBobSmith wrote: Underscorre wrote:

Yeah, I understand why he's jumping off the balcony, and that he actually dies instead of ending the nightmare. The issue is that you can't write once you're dead, but the story is told from the first person perspective. I couldn't sit down with you and tell you about a time I was choked to death, for example, because I'd be dead. So how is Monty telling us this story? Underscorre,

You are absolutely right. It is a convention that a story must have a survivor and when the first person is dead there is no survivor. This death and the summary on the TV news really doesn't work for me either. I have a complete stop and shift of gears, forcing me out of any suspension of disbelief and the whole overload of telling and not showing. Maybe the story still work in the first person if we had the splat and ended with the death experience. O man, that means that that issue is still there... I kind of asked my teacher to help me out with the time and stuff... I guess the grammer and spelling is alright now but this means that i still have a lot of work to do... (Which i don't like concidering that it takes really long for someone with dyslectia...) So this is probably going to take me a good week, sorry...

But as a splat, you mean a written sound effect? Also should i get rid of the news repport?