Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20190221225024/@comment-35711173-20190221231723

L0CKED334,

Grammar/punctuation/spelling, etc:

She grasped it tight in her hand and shoved it forward.

Would "tightly" be better?

It was stuck, almost as if glue to the wood.

Would "glued" be better?

From beyond the trees a figure appeared in black.

I think you need a comma after trees.

Emma had been taught long ago that many of the Christian traditions had been borrowed from Pagan ones and adapted to form what we know of as Christmas.

I don't think you need the of in "of as Christmas." Try "as Christmas."

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In that tiny space she found herself wishing that the gods her great-grandmother could really hear her pleas and help remove this pain.

This is confusing. Something feels like it is missing around the gods and her great grandmother. Should this be

In that tiny space, she found herself beseeching the gods of her great-grandmother to remove this pain.