Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20140715135351/@comment-24381191-20140715194159

Mystreve wrote:

Sykokillah wrote:

Mystreve wrote: Worldwide snow in summer. I like the idea. But, I'd like some more build-up on the "beasts" themselves. They really aren't very scary, to be honest. You introduce them too quick and it desensitized me for the rest of the story. They just kind of pop up and mutilate people? What's this have to do with all the snow? Meh.

I've always been a fan of writers who hint at something terrible, and "lovingly" paint just enough of a picture to leave a horrible thought in the reader's mind. Why not concoct a being, or beings, who are orchestrating this worldwide phenomenon just out of our sight, "behind the curtain"? Blood is fine, but give us some appetizers before serving the main course. Thanks for the feedback, can you give me some example on how to improve it. I just gave you a few... No, on how to give you "some appetizers" The stuff you said I can't incorporate because there's nothing like that in the original story (linked above).