Talk:I Bought My Son a Bucket of Slime for Christmas, and Now I Need Some Questions Answered/@comment-5733573-20181228042218

WARNING: SPOILERS BELOW

This story doesn't work. On top of a completely unlikable narrator who makes nonsensical decisions (a blowtorch?  Really?), it also suffers from a tonal problem, dropping attempted jokes and humor in the middle of a crisis situation. It reads like he's a moron who couldn't care less about his child (whose name he couldn't even be bothered to tell us except in a parenthetical afterthought). It's the very definition of burying the lead. His kid's been eaten by slime and the thought that begins his story is "Kids these days!  Amiright?!" Added to this, the story was almost completely predictable. I'll admit that I didn't see the stretching coming, but I know the only way this story would end was with the kid getting eaten.

I'd say send it back to the drawing board, but honestly the ending is so predictable and so uninspired that it might not even be worth it.