Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37090617-20181006214715/@comment-35711173-20181007000558

First, you need to fix your spelling errors. I counted ten. Likewise, I counted five grammar and four punctuation errors. You need to fix those before anyone will take your story seriously.

Read this blog entry. It lists free spelling/grammar checking sites. If it won't pass the free mode of grammarly, it's got too many errors for people to work with here.

User blog:DrBobSmith/Basic Spell and Grammar Checking

Second, you make an incredibly common error. I guess they don't teach it in the schools now.

"But 6th graders and 7th graders have different lunch times." I think to myself.

This should be

"But 6th graders and 7th graders have different lunch times," I think to myself.

Note the comma. A quote that is part of a sentence is denoted by a comma, not a period.

You can edit your draft above. Hover around the bottom right corner until options for editing pop up. Please do so and get the story to that level of clean.