Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-10950063-20131125204106/@comment-5643552-20131126232113

Twilight The Siren wrote: LOLSKELETONS wrote:

Twilight The Siren wrote: my pasta has no problems whatsoever yet lolskeletons deletes it i mean What The ****  dude! I tend to auto-reject short, grammatically abhorrent text walls. Try submitting a proper story and maybe I'll consider seriously reviewing it. That wasnt short, i made it better for you and scarier then the original. Am I a joke to you?!?!?!

While the grammar on the "improved" version is better than the original (though not good), the pasta itself is still seriously undercooked. It reads like a short list of events that occurred in a story rather than the story itself. Just a list; no context seems to have been given. See also.