Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30402176-20170111165129/@comment-29196722-20170120134201

Well the ending gave me goosebumps congratulations.

The story was a little too short for me but hey i enjoyed One for the Baron and that was a short storty(historical too).

As for the rotting corpes and dying of malnutrion that doesn't happen(who knew watching a lot of Crime Investigation shows would help me in the long run?) and that's pretty simple science, I'm pretty sure that a Man could survive longer than two days without food but you didn't specify their ages and said they were kids so malnutrion would probably strike them faster. Maybe I'm a dumb dumb.

Also for the rotting in the basement part there's also a contradiction in your story(Would you kindly play this when you read the next paragraph?).

Corpses doesn't decompose that long!

According to enkivillage this is what it states in their website:

"The duration it takes for a dead body to decompose depends on various factors, any of which may affect the necessary time it takes to break the body down. If a dead body is inside a coffin and buried deep underground for instance, the body could even take 50 years for every tissue of the body to disappear. However, if the body is exposed to the elements, the decaying process will be very fast. The most important thing to remember in decomposition is the exposure of the dead body to bacteria. In order to survive, bacteria need oxygen and are found in large concentrations in water. Therefore, if a dead body is exposed to water or air, then it will dramatically decompose. Insects and animals will feed on tissues if a dead body is exposed to them, and this also quickens the decomposing process."

Now i might have just cornered myself and you're playing Pursuit against me but read this again:

"The darkness of the basement made it impossible to tell if it was day or night-time. Before long, an entire day had passed."

The boys wouldn't have seen or known that a day already passed because there were no windows or anything that would let oxygen in so even if the parents arrived a week late the corposes would only reach the early process of decomposing meaning that either the boys had a way to have oxygen in or *Slams desk* it was more than three days!