Talk:Kagome Kagome/@comment-7212261-20140304084313

Honestly, I'd give this a 6/10 at best (where 0 is utter bilge, 5 is so-so, and 10 is near-flawless). It started off pretty strong with a semi-plausible premise, but kind of got hoisted by its own petard around halfway through. A lot of it felt forced and/or cheesy; there were lots of "creepy" clichés that didn't really feel like they needed to be there and made the story less convincing, and the attempts at humour were jarring and kinda tin-eared in my opinion (the word 'zalgonic' alone completely killed any credibility the narration had built up). The narration could have been better organised, as well, particularly towards the end.

This isn't the worst thing I've read on this site by a long shot (dear god the things I've seen), but I think the original song was far more disturbing than this.