User blog comment:Hsshall/PASTA WAS DELETED?!/@comment-15097363-20140609211350/@comment-4832646-20140609233551

Your story was not by any means well written.

It had quite the few dialogue errors, and the from the first paragraph alone, it was rushed. You probably wrote it in maybe thirty minutes.

Also, I want to know why this girl, which is apparently you, didn't just shut off/unplug the Wii when things went wrong and then leave the room. Pretty much common sense. You waited and then "OH, it won't shut off!" That's cliche, btw.

And suddenly, the game's hurting you in real life, another cliche. Yet, you somehow survived.

Also, considering this is technically a haunted game pasta, it would've been deleted anyhow due to being a blacklisted subject.