Talk:Stereotype/@comment-26030957-20160523160958

Very atmospheric and filled with a feeling of dread.

Excellent first line. "Dude, this is stupid": how many misadventures have begun with this being exclaimed? Lol. It has a sense of doom to it, as well as being snarky and juvenile which lends itself perfectly to the creepypasta genre.

I liked all the references to E. A. Poe. Raven's cawing, nevermore, and filling the wall in with bricks like in The Black Cat.

I thought this really revealed a lot about the character of Matt: "He was a football player in appearance only. He had the physique for it but not the passion. He preferred to stay inside and listen to heavy metal or silence." Great stuff there, simple but very poignant and revealing.

It did feel a little rushed though, and I would have liked to hear more about what it was that Gary did to Matt to make him react in such a dreadful manner. I think their relationship needs to be fleshed out a little more, if not with exposition filled dialogue then a flashback.

Was the title trying to say something about the lack of character development and slightly cliche nature of the story?