Talk:The Blue House/@comment-5733573-20181012172319

This story needs some work. Plot-wise, it's certainly unnerving, but it's not clear at all what's going on. This kind of vagueness really harms the story and leaves the reader unsatisfied.

Secondly, there are so many run-on sentences and comma splices. These really really really need to be fixed. Also, give this a thorough proofread, because some sentences are missing words.