Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25975226-20150405121553

Please feel free to suggest any other titles, this one certainly does not have to be the title I end up going with. Now that that's out of the way, I haven't had much luck with poetry on this wiki, so I decided to try something different. Please give me your harshest feedback, because I want to make this poem really good. Thank you!   Don't worry child, I'm a friend! Invite me in. What happens then? I realize you're only ten. There half a day, then gone again.   I possess your ev'ry brainwave, You humans always think you're brave. I'll make you my personal slave. I won't hurt you if you behave.   You let me in, though you were shy. Introduced to you by some guy. And you know you cannot deny, Everything promised, I provide. <p data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-new-node="true" data-rte-washtml="1">  <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">You'll try to run, you'll try to hide. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">Go ahead! Well, at least you tried. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">Important things get thrust aside. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">"I'll make it all better!" I lied. <p data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-new-node="true" data-rte-washtml="1">  <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">Talking fast will not help you now! <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">You're burning; Sweat falls down your brow. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">I hear you breathing fast, and loud. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">A lucid mind I won't allow. <p data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-new-node="true" data-rte-washtml="1">  <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">You feel trapped inside your mind. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">I vow it's only me you'll find. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">Better judgement? I've made it blind! <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">You'll want to leave this world behind. <p data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-new-node="true" data-rte-washtml="1">  <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">I'm the destroyer of thoughts and all mankind. <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">I'm the contract of death you willingly signed. <p data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-new-node="true" data-rte-washtml="1">  <p data-rte-empty-lines-before="1" data-rte-fromparser="1" data-rte-line-start="true" data-rte-washtml="1">As you plummet from the mezzanine, Say my name, methamphetamine. <ac_metadata title="Poem: Destroyer of Mankind"> </ac_metadata>