Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190113014104/@comment-33904527-20190113150705

NedWolfkin wrote: I suggest shortening this a bit. I will admit I only read half of it because I was discouraged by how long it looks, and the fact that the beginning really doesn't do anything to drag its readers in.

Sorry I couldn't have been more help. Where did you get up to? I put a lot of effort into this pasta specifically; I'd appreciate it if you could read the other half and tell me what you think.