Talk:Debt/@comment-35419816-20180427104927

though it does indeed show after a few readings that this was written in one night, I really enjoyed this! there was something compelling about the old man in the flashback. i was impressed when i was skimming the comments anx saw you say this was slammed out in a night, and i think had you spent more time on it this would be a damn masterpiece! but as it stands it's a decent story, especially the haunting final line. i know this is an older pasta and idk if you're still around to see this comment, but you have some serious creative writing talent J hardy!