Talk:Mother's Lunches/@comment-25941663-20160831175646

This was nicely written with great wording. It flowed perfectly from scene to scene. Great technical writing. You did though confuse "its" with "it's" quite a few times. You need to be more careful with these little errors; they are very hard to catch.

I loved the atmosphere you created. Fantastic work there. I have to say though, the ending was kinda predictable. I agree with Christian. You oversold it.

Anyway, it was a nice short read. Well done.