Talk:Tobit: The Bleeding Sky/@comment-24996913-20150301055249

Wow, can you write something I don't enjoy from the beginning to end?

First off, like the previous commenter said, this was the perfect length for this pasta. You packed it with description, which is hard to do tastefully these days, and I was hooked a few sentences in.

Unlike the previous commenter, I don't believe you needed to gradually transition the characters reactions. Just like in real life, people can abruptly think differently of you with one action or belief. I believe it makes it more realistic for the transition to be a bit abrupt because in the real world we face such transgressions.

All in all, trying not to go into too much detail because I'm sure you already know my love for the first installment of this pasta, I love this and am on my way to read the next installment after I finish up this review. Great work, and keep 'em coming.