Talk:Insula/@comment-26425680-20180109050806/@comment-26399604-20180109140907

Hi Thomas,

I know this is quite a long read, so thanks for taking the time to review this!

Pacing and Characters

I'm glad the pacing worked fine along with the development of the characters. That's one of the things I've been trying to work on. Also with each new story, I try to challenge myself by expanding on a aspect or doing something entirely new not see in my previous stories. In this one's case, I added more characters (prior to this, the most I ever had was five at a time) and tried to flesh them out to a degree. So, it was nice to see those efforts reflected in it.

Inspiration

You're spot-on with the inspiration. Alien was the biggest (Aliens is my all-time favorite movie!) with a small influence from The Thing (loved that movie as well). I wanted to do my own take on a scenario like it. I actually had a lot of fun just looking at random concept art of spaceship interiors and the sort from random artists. It wasn't long before the wheels started turning and ideas for different stories flooded my mine.

Overly Descriptive

Sometimes, I do spot-checks on different stories and mine happened to be the areas you mentioned were overly descriptive. That's another piece I need to work on in general. That'll definitely be one of the challenges I will apply moving forward. I'm glad I was able to address those two areas you mentioned though. I most certainly will take that earned point!

Nitpicks and all CAPS

In regards to that area in chapter five -- originally, it was italicized. I think I was copying updated pieces to a personal site for storage (which doesn't use the Wiki's format for italicizing) and somehow removed it in the process. I'll make sure I reapply those. With the common noun capitalization, those particular words were originally italicized (the reason for the comment below about it). Why? A stylistic approach. I wanted to see if it worked or not and obviously it was a negative.

Now, when I removed the italics, I substituted the capital words. Seeing how they still come off as distracting, I'll remove those as well -- feedback like this let's me know about if these types of things are a blaring issue or not, so thanks!

Conclusion

I'm glad you enjoyed the story. FYI, I am planning to expand this universe. I've been working out the details and outlines of stories I want to touch on for quite some time now. There's actually quite a lot I want to introduce with, what I hope is, a more original direction. There's a plenty of challenges I want to attempt and hopefully they'll pan out for the good. Anyways, thanks again for taking the time to read it and review it. The feedback was very helpful and gives me an more of an idea of where this story stands.