Talk:Aesthetically Pleasing/@comment-27400645-20160312134757

Pros:

• Love the overarching concept behind the story. I may never look at an airbrushed celeb in a magazine the same way again. • The exchange between the man and the woman is genuinely creepy and unsettling. I actually found myself on edge, which hasn't happened from reading a story on this website in a LONG time.

Cons:

• The opening part of the story feels a tad overwritten. The language is so flowery and formal that it doesn't feel like something an actual human would say...which I realize technically ISN'T what's happening, but we don't know that at the time. It just took me out of the story a little bit. • Love the idea for the ending, didn't like the execution. The phrase "the O nes my fellow sisters were confined in because of societal standards" is completely unnecessary. The image of the women taking off the masks gets that across by itself, and adding that sentence just feels like screaming "THIS IS THE MORAL OF THE STORY," ya know?

I'd call it a 7.5 out of 10 (or 3/4 stars, whichever you prefer). Looking forward to seeing more from you.