Talk:Cousin Tommy/@comment-5269370-20140102164548

I especially like the last paragraph. It wraps up a good pasta very, very nicely. As for the rest of story, like it said, it was good; nothing particularly special unfortunately.

You have a great use of language and a talent for setting a scene, and although the plot wasn't outstanding, it was satisfying enough to make this an entertaining read.

I would recommend you try to be a little more horrifying with the detail here. The scene in the forest seemed to be rushed into without any real build-up. The snappy, quick sentences worked out very well for the ending, but it ruined the build-up a little, I thought.

Other than everything I've said though, this is a good pasta, and I would recommend it to most people.

7.2/10