Talk:The Number of Darkness/@comment-26054278-20150901190603/@comment-26054278-20150902003513

Personally, I have to apologize, as I don't think that the critique I left you here is a very good one, mainly because it isn't in-depth. Partially my fault for not getting to this earlier.

I would have liked to have seen that original 12,000 word edition.

I don't know, I just think that in comparison to the pacing of everything else, it seemed off to me.

Reading over the comments again now shows that Snaketongue felt the same, so you could also ask him if my explanation isn't the best.