Talk:Mullaghbrack/@comment-25941663-20160613235737

This was an enjoyable read. The second part, after they entered the cave was executed superbly with some very strong horror moments. I would have like it more, though, if the part where they are lost was a bit longer and more drawn out. Maybe something about the first couple of days they spent in the tunnels or their increasingly rising suspicion that something is there with them.

I loved the part after Charlotte died. Very creepy and how Alyn found a handful of auburn hair and then turned around to see Charlotte was gone was top-notch work.

All in all, a creepy little tale. Good job.