Talk:Secret/@comment-24704933-20140521154209

Saw that there were no comments, decided I should be the first.

Great job on this pasta, think you got the right balance of description and actual action. I noticed a few minor grammatical errors but decided to just leave them be, as they didn't really distract from the actual story.

I give it a 9/10

Thanks for writing this, it made my day better.