Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160426151716/@comment-34296765-20160511003047

Frank here just took most things I was going to say. I think it's nice, I would only give the introductionary paragraph a bit of remodeling as it kind of sounds awkward and amateur ("One time my friend and me were out hunting in a big forest in our home country in Australia, and I saw a huge monster"). Other than that, it's good.

Good luck!