Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25610621-20141101201840/@comment-24881871-20141102080751

Your vocabulary is above average and your writing is on par with most pastas on this site. The main issues here are spelling and conjugation. Some examples are "There where articles of furniture" and "they where shroud in articles of dust." These should be "There were" and "they were shrouded," respectively. You also confuse "its" and "it's" quite a lot. For future reference, the former is possessive and the latter is a contraction of "it" and "is." These errors, combined with the abysmal formatting in which you originally uploaded the pasta, led to its deletion. You've already corrected one of the problems. Fix the rest and see if you can get some more input from other users in the workshop before reuploading it.