Talk:Hyperopia/@comment-25226524-20140820011917

I really like this. The writing is great. The flow and description are all on point with the length of the story. The slow reveal worked great, and I thought your modern take on the b---man was the icing on the cake. It was also wise of you to throw the more well known river reference in at the end, in case the reader didn't get the earlier reference. Good work.