Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37041992-20181004223948/@comment-10502460-20181005031807

NoTimeCreepy wrote: First things first you need to put (unreviewed) in the title.

I think I was more sick then scared. The first paragraph at the end, get rid of the min, five mins, ten min. The 2nd through the 5th paragraph you have noise so many times, use a different term for noise, like a loud thud or something that expresses the sound. If you Google loud noise, it will give you other words. Same thing with the rest of the story. Putting "unreveived" in the title has always been optional, though most people do it.