Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26112985-20150914023114/@comment-25547916-20150916143935

This is a pretty enjoyable story, it catches the attention well and holds on to it. There numerous little errors scattered throughout, but you mentioned you haven't really proofread it yet, so those are mostly irrelevant. I really like the progression of the narrator's relationship with the devil, how their first meeting is silent and the second seems warm and manipulative. I'd love to see this relationship continue once the ending's written. As for the ending itself, I'm fairly curious to see how this could conclude; it seems like most of the story's been told at this point. Something I think could be better is his actual deal with the devil, killing somebody for a year seems to be fairly slanted towards the devil's side. Perhaps the deal could be awarding benefits to the narrator's wife and son, so they don't go to hell? Maybe the narrator is unable to act on this deal and the devil gives him a more tempting one? I dunno, there's lots of ways for this to end, and I'm excited to see how you wrap things up.