Talk:The Legend of The Fang Baby of Old Pearsall Road/@comment-25326117-20160612010836

1.  We have The Donkey Lady, Midget Mansion, The Chinese Cemetery, The Haunted Railroad Tracks, El Camaracito Bar (Home of the Dancing Diablo.. it's a real place), La Llorona (The Crying Woman) and La Lechuza (a witch with an owl's body).

Aren't The Haunted Railroad Tracks suppose to  capitalized since it's a name of a place?

Same goes with The Crying Woman since it's a name of a specific entity in this case.

La Lechuza is all right, but the description just needs an apostrophe since it's possessive (a witch with an owl's body). I also usually see a period outside the parentheses.

2. However, one legend always did hold my fascination above all the others: The Fang Baby of Old Pearsall Rd.

I added the colon to be more specific to the legend that the protagonist is referring to and The since it's part of the name of the legend.

3. For a split second he saw what he thought was a toddler, about two or three years old.

Two or Three are spelled at as numbers one through ten constantly are, it's only after ten when you can write the numbers out.

4. "Wasn't no baby, man!" growled Pete as he got out of the car to assess the damage.

I am sure your sentence only needs one exclamation point, it gets the point across just as well as using two. Why is Pete blaming Eddy since he was the one that swerved the car and saw the baby?

5. "No man, I saw a baby!"

Wasn't it only Pete that saw the baby?

6. "Wasn't no baby, man!" growled Pete as he got out of the car to assess the damage.

I think you should stick to using one exclamation point, it gets the point across just as well. I also confused. Wasn't Pete the one that saw the baby and swerved the car to avoid it? Why would Eddy get blamed for the car wrecking since Pete was the one that saw the baby.

7. "Was it a baby?" he thought.

I think the sentence only needs a question mark.

(Overall, the story was very confusing.  Was it only Pete and Eddy in the car?  I'm not even clear how Pete could die from the baby's bite.  Why was the toddler even doing in the street?)