User blog:ShawnCognitionCP/New batch of pasta's

Hey guys, I just finished two pastas and want to know serious opinions. If by chance, you do happen to read them, please be brutaly honest. I need to know what is wrong or right in what i have so far. But anyways, here you go if you decide to check them out.

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Twisted?venotify=created

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Painted?venotify=created