Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24714617-20150521212703/@comment-24356706-20150523200310

Ohh, ok cool. I like the basses for the story, I think this could become something good, I don't think this was a failed attempt, I think all you need to do is read the story from a readers perspective and ask yourself "Is this understandable and did I get my point across?"... I think a few revisions with this in mind would make the story a great read.