Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35515534-20190605053523/@comment-39691282-20190611180904

This story is honestly ok. I like how you try to develop the main character a bit, and tell us some things about him; that was good with building up to him getting Tinkerbell. One thing that I think can be fixed is building up the monster in the story more. The monster itself I can't easily get a perfect idea of, and it could use some more explaining. To wrap this up, I will say the intro was good, but the Present day section on the other hand needs work.