Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36300157-20190219121536/@comment-33904527-20190305221142

This is almost laughably bad. The wording could use a massive rework (kind and nice? kicking on rocks? slicking on shoes?) and the plot is clichéd and predictable. I wish I could say that the story was salvageable in some way, but it really isn't. Try and come up with slightly more original plotlines that "spooky monster in spooky house".