Talk:The Creature in Your Mind/@comment-5733573-20180427061049

It's a cool idea, but a bit sloppy in terms of execution. You have the line, "But I suggest you to not sleep on your back because it might be more painful," which doesn't really go anywhere. It's not clear how pain would be involved. Also, the ending is very abrupt and unsatisfying. I wish this packed more of a punch.