Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-27007772-20150614164025/@comment-27007772-20150715204126

StevieGLiverpool wrote: Too short, not enough detail me thinks. You may be trying to go for something mysterious, but it doesn't work in this scenario. However I am terrible with feedback for improvement, I'll eave someone else to do that :/

I wasn't exactly going for something mysterious. I was going for a straight forward, yet a bit is left out ordeal.

If you look at the plot of both In Torment stories (You just read part 2, which relies heavily on part 1. I think this may be why you feel some details were left out and it was too short. You skipped over half the story. In Torment. That's a link to part 1.) it is a mirror to the bible.

You can take the story literally- as it is.

Metaphorically- I've left plenty of things around that show deeper meaning to some events.

Literally & Metaphorically- it's a mirror to the bible and plenty other biblical texts, at points dialog is an exact copy of things said in these stories. It's blasphemous, but not to a point of simply ranting.

Part III has just started being made. Hopefully I'll be able to swing some opinions with it. If not, either part III or 4 will suit as an end to the series.