Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37138398-20190226125235/@comment-36627132-20190226125920

Spelling and Grammar Issues: First off, this story is in two large walls of text. Try breaking it down into smaller paragraphs. This story has a lot of words that don't need to be capitalized ("Thing", "Empire", "Dimensions", "Golden Age", etc.)

Plot Issues: A description of "the Thing" takes up most of the story. I'm sorry but this story isn't creepy at all.