Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28862560-20160627172357/@comment-28862560-20160628193142

Thanks for the feedback, I'll do some edits and post the revised edition again. I actually planned to keep the narrative smaller by having the search and rescue discover the mountaineer's bodies in the very beginning and those bodies appear badly mutilated, the story then focuses on a camera found on one of the dead mountaineers and the camera would show some pictures and that's where I intended to leave a cliffhanger but I found that a bit mundane and predictable (it also felt like a rip-off from the Kholat intro because that's originally from where I got the whole idea of the story). I decided to go with the youtube videos because I thought it might feel new and more attractive to the reader due to a sense of mystery in it (the reader might be wondering about what happens in the next video) but I guess I can trim that portion down or do some changes to it to make the whole story more terse.