Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32289854-20180308164744/@comment-9041013-20180322121911

AHHHH DA WALL OF WORDS HAS KEELED MY EYES.

Alrighty in all seriousness, not too savy, not too "ooh im a smart guy, look at me, I type big words" kind of writing. I like it. Simple, nice, not a randomly bombastic kind of ghost story. I mean, I did suspect it being a ghost story once a random Georgie showed up (I hope you figure out the reference here) and the kid not hearing the screetching radio did confirm my suspecion but I still enjoyed it and I did get a couple of stress shots throughout the story.

Guess, I'm old fashioned when it comes to my horror taste.

Here's something I have to let out of my system, please bare with me, I'm sick of PC culture that has been running rampant currently all over, so this gay couple thing seems forced to me, right now, out of a personal bias. Not a bad thing, just needed to vent my frustration over social politicing.

I do like how your story worked into common ghost tropes; the screetching radio kind of signaling the arrival of a ghost or marking a haunted area, the part in which a ghost is going to make your car flip over if you find it haunts a road section, the isolated location which makes it make some twisted sense of sense.

I agree with Kolpik on the couple being a little too casual about being almost murdered by a ghost and the lack of major reaction towards coming across a ghost. I mean, you take  people to places where certain natural phenomena cause hellucinations and the like and people lose their shit, and this is like "Oh well".

Fix the wall of text, and you've some typos you need to fix as well (at one instance for example you meant to write "he" about the boy and you wrote "het" or something.)

Overall, I think its a nice story that should be posted on the site :D