User blog comment:Underscorre/Jeff the Killer Rewrite Contest!/@comment-28938497-20151108130000

My story was going to be about Jeff already having some minor mental condition before the story starts. From the fights with the bullies to rumors, pressure starts to build, and he eventually snaps and tries to kill the bullies with a knife (he hasn't even got disfigured or properly insane yet) In their self defense they lead him to the science storeroom and throw a bottle of some really strong acid or other corrosive solution at his face.

So he's not got white skin from fire and bleach. Instead, he now has no face. He's rushed to hospital, they reconstruct his face the best they can but he no longer has a proper nose, or eyelids. He has to use eyedrops ten times a day now, and due to stitches in his mouth in incapable of smiling even if he wanted to. and the reconstruction leaves him looking grotesque. He starts to get incredibly paranoid and attack people who so much as look at him too long.

He eventually decides to remove the stitches, opening up his moth past where it should be, and bleaches his own skin permanently white, adding in some black eyeshadow to mask how unnatural his eyes look.

He's now utterly convinced that he is the most beautiful and perfect man on the planet, but the paranoia's still there, and people are scared of him now (you know how creepy THE pic of Jeff looks) So he decides that they are the ugly ones, and he must 'fix' them. So now he has a motive for killing besides "emos be cray cray"

And that's what I would have written if I was capable of writing right now.