Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26864059-20150807055035/@comment-25037895-20150807062543

It seems alright to me, but a lot of these types of stories are a bit generic. This one seemed to dodge most of the tropes associated with video themed pastas. Still, if you would like to raise the chance of your story staying on the site, then try to add something that happens in the video that might surprise the reader. You have that with a whirring blade I think. Still, you could add something that makes it stand out more.