Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25558572-20140630002957

Warning: The idea here is graphic.

Summary: Marc is sleeping in her bedroom in a nightgown, using thick blankets to keep her warm because the heating has failed in a few floors. A centipede- a fairly small one- is attracted by her body heat and nestles inside her genitals, though Marc is quickly woken up by the pain. She tries to remove the insect, but it claws into her and Marc’s screams alert her friend Rain (from the next room). Rain puts on first-aid gloves and tries by hand to extricate the centipede, but fails, and Marc is quickly taken to the hospital while Rain scolds herself and the Rainbow (a small group of teenagers) for finding the incident funny.

At the hospital, doctors still can’t get the centipede out and decide minor surgery is necessary. The centipede has dug into areas of Marc’s walls and is causing necrosis, and the damaged flesh has to be removed. When it is, nobody finds that one centipede egg has reached Marc’s uterus and is growing into an enlarged centipede embryo from the nutrients. Two weeks later, a bloody, painful centipede abortion occurs, leaving Marc barely alive. The story ends with her sleeping in the hospital after the second operation while another centipede patters across the floor.

(I know the last bit is kind of sketchy, should I forget about that bit? Any other parts I should change or remove? I know this sounds kind of unrealistic but I still think it's disturbing and potentially believable.) 