Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5888665-20151002020203/@comment-27008899-20151013233126

I see a few issues. But the biggest being that it's not really that creepy. I do appreciate the referrence to the underpants gnomes though. Second, no parentheses. If it's not necessary to read then it's not necessary to write. The last thing is your message is too well hidden. I was only able to see your point because you noted it, otherwise I was thinking it was a story about a weird computer glitch. If your trying to make a point, make sure it is obvious by the end.