Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180615171904/@comment-9041013-20180619033742

Icydice wrote: I do apologize Bloody, but I really didn't like this all too much.

I know people have mentioned this already, and I've noticed it in some of your other work, but you have a tendency to have quite a few grammar mistakes in your drafts, specifically in terms of comma usage.

The story felt quite weak to be honest. I have no clue what happened or why it happened. Here's what I got out of it. A guy can't sleep because he has dreams of the plague. He hallucinates people from that time period, and then finds out he has the plague himself? It just felt weird and random to me. Like Jd said, it's all over the place.

Sorry man, I hope this didn't seem too harsh. Nothing to apologize for. Here's my take from what you say, people get stuck on the first piece of information they get. Mama Mia...

I guess not everything I come up with is that good eh ;D