User blog comment:Raidra/Creepypasta Nightmares/@comment-4849011-20141111131739/@comment-24040907-20141113024111

Oh, no, he's long since moved past that. He's got a family and a high-end job. He's a great guy.

The idea of a relatable protagonist being struck down in his pride is a sad one. We as readers want to see him raised to his former glory, and we will sympathize with his anguish during his journey. However, this sympathy will fade if he becomes one of those whiny "Luke Skywalker" types, if you know what I mean. So keep him tough, and keep his dark past shrouded in secrets. The car crash and the other scandals add to this trait.

I would definitely suggest showing off Genie's pacifist side. Like you said, show her taking care of Van. The audience may begin to see her as a heartless scientist experimenting on our poor wittle protagonist if we don't see this side, especially because this anti-drug is so violent!

I understand the use of DVDs. I've never really followed sports so I wasn't aware that sometimes they put out DVDs. In my mind I thought "Sports? People are always 'taping the big game' so it would stand to reason that you can watch old sports on tape." But I suppose it makes more sense your way.

I wouldn't suggest the Workshop, but only because I prefer to talk up front, rather than sending you off to another forum. I'm like the anti-tech-support guy who refuses to transfer you xD

P.S. I like that Shoelace philosophy. Is there anywhere I can view these comics? Do you have them on here or somewhere else?