Talk:The Cat/@comment-25052433-20150701234504

Nicely done here. A very cool concept executed quite well in my opinion. It flowed well with a good pace, it kept me engaged and didn't linger too long on mundance instances. The plot was very interesting, and I am pretty sure this is one of the first stories about people being watched that has been pulled off in quite this way.

You did a nice job of leading the reader into believing that the cat was actually leaving the messages itself, so the twist at the end, when we find out that some wierdo was actually watching this guy all this time, hit home really well.

The only real critiques that I have is some of the transitions seem a bit rushed and don't come out quite right. The story sort of jumps mood quite fast in a few places, like the kid coming home and find the door unlocked. The entire paperboy aspect could also be shortened down or even done away with, as it has no real bearing on the story. You could have just as easily said the guy was walking to work or school and saw the cat two days in a row, and would have achieved the same effect. The transition from the ambulance to the police also came quite fast. You never really explained how he convinced the EMTs that he wasn't crazy. Having some degree of explaination there would have helped to move things along.

All in all though, I really enjoyed this story. It was well written and executed, and aside from the minor errors, it was a great pasta. Excellent job!