Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-2240864-20140401232334

Eurgh. You've (hopefully) seen what I can do with words. If not, well then just imagine the worst tortu--I mean just go read my stuff. Or better, hop on over to Amazon.com and throw money at your screen until the two books I've put out materialize inside your mailbox or wherever your mail tends to manifest.

Shameless plug aside, I was thinking about what makes Jeff such a bad story and which parts of it would work in a better story/framework.

Jeff gets little to no character development or real motivation. The plot is incoherent at best and the events of the story only exist to create Jeff as in the image. Heck, even his brother getting arrested only serves to add a line of dialogue to the bullies, and outside of that it does nothing other than being unrealistic.

That's where this handsome horror comes in.

I have read good stories. I have read bad stories. I have read A Meeting with AL-Qaida (http://trollpasta.wikia.com/wiki/A_Meeting_with_AL-Qaida). I think I have a pretty good idea of what makes a story a coherent story.

What I'm not saying is that I can make him as scary as he is...he is scary isn't he? No? I didn't think so. What I'm saying is I can make him a character one could relate to and understand why he becomes what he does, and with an ending that makes sense.

What do you hoodlums and whatnots have to say about this?

Jeff 2.0 FUND IT! FORGET IT!  