Talk:Sticky Fingers/@comment-24532164-20161209201910

HUGE Laughing Jack overtones at the start, but thankfully no mutilated children. That being said I think you've an interesting concept, but still not great. Self-Insert killers and beings have plagued the site for a while, and while this stays away from a few of those cliches it hits too many for my comfort. The writing is also a lot more "telling" than "showing", so that could also be better. For your credit though this was a decent read, with a decent ending. It didn't make me feel any suspension or tension, but the idea of a monster that tricks your children is always unnerving, even if I don't understand why Sticky Fingers felt the need to lie and steal the kid's toys if he could just take him away at any point. It seems like literally anytime they were outside he could have said, "Wanna see my crib? Really? sweet." because the mom obviously wasn't paying attention.