Talk:Beyond Time/@comment-25052433-20150512004809

This was really cool and not the typical pasta. Where I think this one fell flat was with the narrarator revealing himself to be the god of that universe. I feel that sort of placed a large degree of order into a realm that is described thoughout as being this whimisical dimension of discordian logic.

In the end though, this was a fun read and a great pasta. Keep writing!