Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20170806214502/@comment-28266772-20170821131735

Then just write a third person narrative. You don't have to follow a specific narrative format and this feedback is about improvement. If you're interested in asking another question like, say, "is this up to quality standards", I would say, "Once you clean up the mechanical errors then yes, it largely is." If you just want to patch it up and improve what you've got that's fine. Personally I think it'd meet quality standards after that.

But it's up to you if that's where you want to stop. Everyone here has generally converged on the same idea - this story should be explored in more depth to fulfill its potential. How you do that is up to you but it's probably gonna need, at the very least, characters and plot.