Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4997457-20150903225633

It can be found here: https://www.wattpad.com/163992065-tales-from-abraham-late-night-walks

It;s about a couple walking in the woods, its little sub/backstory/spin-off story of a much bigger non creepypasta story I'm writing. I really need to find out what on earth is phrased wrong and what grammar is bad because it looks like the language barrier of english to english varies from place to place.  