Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24248644-20150115223237/@comment-25891880-20150118160528

Aye sgy, great story. I personally really liked it, and I even liked the part when he figured out the marks were from inside, good job! But one of your biggest problems is your grammar. After writing your story you just need to look at it and edit edit edit. Everyday. That's what I do to make my stories perfect. You need to check each word and make sure the spelling and grammar is correct.

Your grammar problems that were noticeable; > Fear began to creepy into deeper part of my mind What??!! I couldn't even understand that man! xD

> my car suddenly shutted down shut* down

Also, the most effective way to interest the reader in the environment the main character is in, put detail. Describe it. Describe the feeling man!

I would love to see this in the main site, at least after you edit it, right now I give you an 85% rating. Good luck man ;)