Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9967354-20140523110415/@comment-9967354-20140523120924

EmpyrealInvective wrote: After two back to back deletion appeals, I must say, this is a breath of fresh air. It is well-written and I only noticed a few errors ("Bach to the point" opening for one paragraph and a few capitalization errors after. [two I believe]) Literally looking through the first part of the story, those are the only errors I can see in it. You set up an interesting premise and it makes me interested to go onto the other parts. (Which I will probably be doing at work tomm.)

I only have a few tiny suggestions. I would attribute the quote at the beginning to the author and maybe state what book/poem it's from just to set up the story. I noticed some internal dialogue is in italics but other times when Chloe is thinking to herself it is in single quotes. Either works, but I would try to make it uniform across the story. The final thing is just a helpful piece of advice. When it comes to uploading the story on the wiki, I would recommend uploading it all at once as opposed to a serial form. I tried uploading chapters/segments of a story two separate times and found very rarely will someone read the whole thing in the correct order. Uploading it on one single page (with headers/chapters to make it easier to access.) is in my opinion easier and less confusing to readers.

I enjoyed the story and hope to see more posts from ya in the future!

I'll skim through the story and put her thoughts in italics. About the spelling errors, though. Ugh. I feel like an idiot. Autocorrect had been making fun of me, especially in chat, so I decided to turn it off. Now its ghost haunts me.

I am going to put the parts up as a single story. The endings are far too abrupt to allow me to do otherwise. I figured I'd post this little at a time so the length of it wouldn't scare someone off. It would be limited to a single post, of course, and you'd get notifications. I've completed the story anyway.

Thanks a bunch for your reply. Both of you.