Talk:The Cell Phone Game/@comment-24189079-20140530203853/@comment-24189079-20141205230807

I suppose I should clarify, I don't HATE this pasta. I don't love it, and it does have some problems, I guess I just took it kind of personal, since i had been bullied and beaten up before, and when I tried to defend myself, they pulled the race card. (Apparently at my middle school, it was okay for black people to beat up white people) So, I could kind of sympathise with rottenbaucher. If somebody dosen't have any personal connections with the story than I guess it would be pretty good.

The race card was kind of cheap, they could have used something else for that plot element.

That several paragraphs above was just blaitent venting, I actually do think this story has a good idea going for it, it just needs to be patched up a bit.

And on a side note. If some punk kid punched me and gave me a bloody lip, I wouldn't just stand there, There would be no recognizeable remains to burry of whoever punched me.