Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27332453-20151203134752/@comment-27332453-20151203163522

Hi 1nnocenteyes, thanks for taking the time to read the entire thing! I really appreciate it and your feedback is much apprecaited.

I completely agree with you on the short sentence structure; it was something I wanted to explore as a style method in this story. I didn't want to flood a sentence and wanted the short sentences to be used as quick punches. In my next revision, I will better utilize this method (instead of overusing it here).

In terms of the its- I see the first few mistakes you mentioned. Really appreciate you pointing those out. Per your specific example, I'm not example sure I follow you.

I'd is the contracted form of I would, or I had. In the sentence you provided, it could also read- "The only thing I could see where the embers of the small fire I had lit from the night before."

I probably could make it much less wordy. In either case, the "I" is always capitalized.

You other comments are greatly aprpecaited and I am really glad to hear that you liked the story! I've made the necessary edits follow your response, thanks again!