Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-7482321-20140516010250/@comment-4832646-20140517182322

Too many sentences start with "He". Change it up a bit.

Tbh, I am on the fence with this one. On one hand, it can get you thinking. On the other, it seems a lot like you strung us along and in the end there's nothing to actually think about. I guess I kind of feel you need to elaborate more as to what you are trying to get at.