Talk:Bedtime/@comment-29597457-20160812035352

I regard this as one of the best creepypasta's that has been written, but I would like to ask what possessed you to continue with a part 2 onwards?

3 and beyond are not utterly irredeemable, but if I mentally accept the existence of 2 it destroys this story for me.

I feel there are too many fallabilites and plotholes in the sequals to this. For example, the greatest part of this story, in my opinion, is the last line. The implication his parents experienced similar occurrances and they were more limited to that room, or that wall. Not just the protagonist.

2 manages to discount the entity from 1 by creating another sinister entity in another part of the house. 3 onwards makes the existence of 2's entity redundant while completely neglecting the parents experiences.

Was it just coincidence they made a hasty move 10 days after switching to that room?

I've read several of Michael Whitehouses stories and I feel they can be hit and miss. When they hit they REALLY HIT though.

On the off chance Michael reads this, I enjoyed this story so much that I can fully understand why you would want to continue it, and I'd be completely willing to read another attempt at the protagonists experience after having submitted his story to the public eye, but I would urge you- now that you've posted quite a lot of content, to refocus and go full force into quality over quantity.

If nothing else though, this is one of the absolute best creepy stories that there is. It's excellently written save a few typo's and the misuse of the word "throws" (meaning 'to toss an object', Throes is the term you're looking for which tends to be used as 'to be involved in' but the dictionary meaning is something along the lines of a violent outburst. Tbh though, interpretation and understanding make language in the end and it ultimately doesn't matter. I only barely give a shit.)

This is a contender for one of the best creepypastas of all time, not just of the month.