Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180528054340/@comment-33937557-20180528222245

Noticed some of the things already stated, both positive and negative.

To add my input, there are a few easily fixable tense mistakes: this is a big one, but maybe consider changing the last paragraph to the present tense, it might better benefit his explaining the current situation. I might be wrong, but I think it could work.