Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36815674-20180919161410/@comment-36393004-20180920213919

NoTimeCreepy wrote: Does anyone feel like I need to add anything else to it. Maybe to make it pop a little more. Oh, I almost forgot. I know what interminable means and I am sure most people here do, but since the rest of your story doesn't use words like that I would use something more common. It makes it flow beter and easier for people to read. Maybe just make it 'endless' or something to that effect.

If you wanted to build the suspense and leave the reader with a bigger pay-off, then describe the drive home in more detail. Maybe the car behind him seemed to be driving erratic. Let him worry along the way home about the safety of the other driver or grow concerned as to why this person was following him in the first place. A little inner monologue of his doubts, fears, and maybe even him imagining who this person is or what their purpose might be. Is he drunk? Are they after me? Things like that.