Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180706200603/@comment-33937557-20180706203828

I gotta say, I noticed a lot of tense errors in here, so many I don't know if I could properly point them out. A few sentences could use some restructuring. Repetition in some places as well. How you fix them is all up to you, but here are a couple I made changes to.

"I think all of this began the day (remove that located here) Max Wilson walked all over town begging people for water and screaming at those who refused him, saying they were a part of a group called "The Lizards"." (Fix that I recommend.)

"A few days ago, I woke up to the feeling of someone standing over me. 'I opened my eyes to be greeted by my wife and kids. My sweet Marissa jerked the children close to her as her eyes grew wide, making contact with mine." '(Another fix.)

"I sporadically leave the apartment to avoid seeing what has become of my family; it's just too much at this point."

Noticed some formatting issues, too. Whether they were purposeful or not I don't know, but I see lots of extra spaces.

All in all, this has first-draft errors that you can iron out with sites like Grammarly and programs like Word. The story is decent, and, for some reason, the zombified people remind me of the Flood from Dr. Who. You've got something here.