Talk:Hanging Man Hill/@comment-24739611-20140331204018

Woah-ho-ho, what have we here?

A sea of descriptive goodness? Hell yeah. A opening that caught me faster then Halo 3: Blackout's right hook? It's there. A whole southern midriff, detailing the immersion? ...you're making me cry.

But yeah, time for some opinion-ating.

A whole story that relates to that one precious time when we were all 11 years old; that innocence, that simplicity. A time where we'd sleep over with friends, play with action figures, laugh at childish jokes with them,  scare them, get scared by them. Great times indeed...Until the innocence ends. This was illustrated with spectacular detail through this wonderful read.

The overtone. Astounding. The descriptive narration. ham-azing. The obscure fact that the writer gave me a message before I knew about this, with the exact same style. Double RainBAMF. This is perfect! Flawless! I-

Well, I do have kind of a problem.

The grandma should have been introduced earlier. Like just shouting at the kids as they threw their backpacks on the floor, or telling the story of how she lost her husband. Well, not just her. Maybe this story could profit from a little foreshadowing.

For example, if, on his way to the country, he happened to pass by the pole where Roy hung, and felt chills for an unexplainable reason.

But the writing's so good, that's not really even a problem. Kudos, sir!

Wonderful. A little grammar fixes here, and a little less abrupt introduction here, and this would be in War & Peace.

9.5 staypuft marshmellow kids/10