Talk:Don't Eat the Sandwiches/@comment-17758905-20150123204339

By the time the grandmother was talking about the meals she cooked I already knew this story was going Soylent Green.

However, I was surprised when it was revealed the entire family had those same rings. It really brought some suspense in.

I did notice some awkward sentences and phrasings and mispellings, so that's a slight problem.

Anyway, my scales:

Shock: 6 (I already expected the first twist. The second twist was better. The whole there's a sorority of dark practices boosts it up a bit.)

Paranoia: 9/10 (The idea that any woman you meet could be a part of this club definitely induces paranoia, problem is you only have to fear women with a certain ring.)

Dread: 4/10 (There wasn't really much to dread, except what was going to happen to the protagonist when the story was over.)

Overall, rating on the usage of the three types of fear is: 19/30.

The idea this sorority had to be exposed by someone's grandfather and no one else discovered this all, or this new secret sorority hasn't been exposed yet despite the grandfather knows about it seems rather illogical.

As for fact-checking: The only problem I can see is that from what I know is that human meat doesn't taste like beef according to most people. It apparently tastes sweet, and is comparable to either pork or veal.