Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25436006-20140918201750/@comment-25226524-20140918204620

Although ritual stories are not my favorite, this one seems to be done well enough. Most of the technical aspects seem to be in order. There's a few issues here and there, but it's about 95% clear. I think you need to do something to make the new section "Materials" stand out, maybe change it to, "Materials you will need." The single word, although bold and italicized, almost blended into the first list (maybe underline it?).

The other thing I thought you might want to change is the first paragraph under Procedure. I wouldn't go into length, but I think it would help to at least list a few techniques, rather than just saying to look them up. Maybe tell the reader what you prefer, but also give them some other options.

These are just a couple things I noticed. All in all this is pretty well written, and I don't see any major changes that need to be made before you submit it. Proofread it a couple more times, and you should be good to go. Good luck and keep writing.