Talk:The Tar Baby of the Bahamas/@comment-5733573-20180818053455

This was kind of fun! I don't know why the Bahaman government needs to be corrupt in order for your story to work, but apart from that, this was quite enjoyable.

Also, your opening sentence: "When you hear the incessant and familiar wailing of a baby, you know it's upset or sad about something, and it's your powerful human instinct to help others that sparks curiosity as to why the infant could be crying." This makes me think you've never been stuck on a hot, crowded train with a wailing infant. Personally, there is no faster way to shut down my empathy....

I would suggest giving this a look over and simplifying some of your overly pretentious synonyms. For instance, there's no good reason to use a word like "cogitation" here. Changing these to more common words will make them stick out less, feel less forced, and make the story much smoother to read.

Other than that, I liked this. Nice work!