Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20170104231804/@comment-27012445-20170111012826

Thank you, Chrisitan. You really helped me flesh out this story and make it so much more cohesive. As you can tell, I am really putting some great effort in creating a new and fresh take on an old and revered genre of storytelling. I made some significant changes to the arrangement, which as you noted, has really improved the flow. I do want to spend a bit more time with the dialect as you are absolutely correct in identifying one of the huge challenges in writing in this style—going overboard on the speech. It is very easy to cross the line into "ridiculous" territory. Thank you so much for your feedback. It is greatly appreciated.