Talk:Silk Feet/@comment-25975226-20150124070349

I liked this story, but it still needs some work. There are some sentences that don't make any sense at all, for example: "The woman looked to be no older than in her mid-sixties, wearing attire underneath a fur coat that made one think she’s going to walk the red carpet with the most noticeable thing about her attire though is her evening gloves; crimson red velvet silk in a jewelry decal, and her long silver grey hair bundled up in a bun."

Incorrect use of the word merely at the start of the story. It should be 'mostly' or 'mainly'.

There are lots of little errors such as you wrote 'then' instead of 'than', and 'they' instead of 'the' but they can mostly be overlooked.

You also change tenses from past to present a lot which can confuse the reader. Try to avoid that as much as possible.

I loved your descriptions and the plot was very good. The ending was very good too. It leaves the reader wondering, as a creepypasta should. On the whole it needs some work, but it was very good. 7/10!