Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4875940-20140605030032/@comment-9967354-20140605141308

I agree with resident; your character is sort of plain. Sure, the bit with the magic and sorcery ought to make him interesting, but it doesn't. My impression of him isn't positive at all -he seems a bit more intent on telling people about himself and his awesome powers rather than the story. As for the story, I don't see one. Which made the ending -which was supposed to be pretty great- seem weak.