Talk:Revolt/@comment-14391355-20131219235810/@comment-14391355-20131225172042

If I could name yet a few more flaws with the story, one thing that I felt could be improved was how there could have been a little more evidence to suggest that the game was haunted. It does seem slightly odd how instantly the person in the story attributes it to paranormal forces. It wasn't a particularly major problem for me, though. (And perhaps one could say that the person in the story is maybe the kind of guy who gets easily scared by computer glitches, which would make him slightly more likely to think that said glitches were caused by a spirit? Just a wild guess.)

It also seems like the car crash seemed a little too disjunct from the events of the story. I like the concept of creepypastas not giving away too many details in order to be more mysterious, but here the game haunting and car crash seemed a bit too seperate - it seemed as if they were almost unrelated to each other.

Overall, however, these are relatively minor flaws to me. I look forward to seeing more from the author!