Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-38564973-20190218215450/@comment-9041013-20190219103201

What is happening in the story? Why is it happening? Who causes this things, who is affected? This isn't much of a story. It's just an exposition. Also, if we're on about expositions, you should start with an attention catching opening. Your opening doesn't do much.

Knights are low nobility, meaning they had money and power, they didn't live in shacks... They had servants and probably serfs in their service. They had lands and everything. So, this needs some work.

A Kings guard shouldn't leave the Kings presence, it's his closest kind of military man. He is his own personal security. So, the king/shapeshifter shouldn't have sent a body guard but rather a page or a messenger.

Also, this needs a lot of work in the horror department, since well, telling us "but the king is a shapeshifter" isn't scary. You'd have to make it into a longer story to make it work, perhaps make the shapeshifter into someone closer to the knight whom supposed to be dead or something, maybe turn him into the knight himself.

Your english needs a bunch of work here too.

For example, whenever a new character speaks, you start a new paragraph.

And "didn't ... 2... days ago" is not a good way to write something, especially if you write a short story, the word "two" isn't that long or complicated.