Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26113663-20150202113616/@comment-5321651-20150202121057

Well, firstly, I want to say that people look similar. The hotel receptionist calls police immediately after a man that looks similar to another man arrives? That just doesn't make sense. Apart from that, I like the plot. But, on a whole, I don't think this is very well executed. Throughout the story, minor words like "the" and "a" are missing in sentences and it makes it hard to read. I like the idea, but the pasta itself needs a lot of work done on it.