Talk:Gumjaw/@comment-26112985-20150820015057

I had fun reading this story. Adding humorous elements into your pasta can be somewhat of a risk, since horror and comedy are the two hardest genres to write in, but its done well here, and I actually caught myself smiling a few times. Other writers such as Slimebeast, have also utilized this (Sixty Second War immediately comes to mind). The monster "Gumjaw" had an original little twist to it that I liked, which definitely increased my enjoyability.

A couple things that I did not like were how Frank considered suicide once. One has to be in the most dire of situaitons for this to even occur, and even then it is rare, so I found it a little unbeleiveable. I also didn't like it when Elliot said "Crap" just because I have never heard an aging man use that particular word. Those are really minor flaws though, and insignificant in terms of the actual story.

In short, this was a good pasta with a few funny moments. Good job :)