Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20181002204802/@comment-36393004-20181002225423

DrBobSmith wrote: Said the spider to the fly.

Very subtle. You don't even see it until the end of the last paragraph. Is it too subtle? That was one of my concerns too, which is why I brought it to the workshop. I just didn't want to give it away too soon, especially considering how short this is. I could fill it with added detail and try to toss in hints here and there but if the reader has an idea halfway through of what I am going to do...I feel the end would fall flat. I hope it hit the mark I was looking for. If there are any ways I may improve it...I am open to suggestions.