Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4849011-20180321014712/@comment-9041013-20180323001625

Raidra wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: ...but it's very taste specific. The thing about fetishes- uh, I mean... ~clears throat~ ;-)

Thanks for the feedback. Out of curiosity, do you think there's a better place for it to end? In my opinion the first place it could potentially end is the scene with the underclothes. It would leave things unresolved, but it's a "What the blazes is going on here!?" moment, and it leaves it open for readers to write their own ending. As for the explanation, I was going for a cold, clinical approach, but I get your point.

All in all I have to say that someone reacting, "Meh, it's not terrible," is better than the reaction I was afraid I'd get. I don't like to post mind-control stories for fear some nutjob will claim, "This is a true story!" Sure, I'm really a supervillainous scientist from a comic book and I have a building full of subjects I'm experimenting on at my leisure, but I've decided to jeopardize that by bragging about it on the Creepypasta wiki! (I hope that rant was entertaining enough to make you feel justified for coming to this thread in the first place) I think its over all not that long, outside of the last part which, to me, is useless. Conspiracy theorists will love this post, seriously, do you have any idea how many people actually believe that a super advanced alien race of reptiles operate on earth in earth manner?

I also came across a person whom I hope was method acting herself as the heroine of a story about a woman who worships a self made deity based on the biblical Belial term. People are weird.

This is for a niche audience, and it did give me a feeling of "man, that would suck if those things exist in mexico and what not" but nothing to creepy. Also, the over atmosphere of this some undisclosed location with a seemingly unexplained purpose does give of a lot of space for speculation. soooo