Talk:Shoes/@comment-25042509-20150521184455

A few things

1. That story was cliche, boring and dumb

2. Even if it was a really good story using a picture of the Joker breaks the illusion.

3. Also how did you get the picture? I know that you got it off of wallpaperswide.com but how did the character get it?

4. How can you forget to load a revolver? If it was an auto I could understand but you can see the bullets in a revolver?

5. The unregistered gun thing is stupid. If you had set up a reason for your character to have an unregistered gun (e.g. they were a criminal) I might buy it. It's obviously just a stupid plot device to stop the cops from intervening. You could have just said the phone didn't work.

Please take these into consideration when you write your next story.