Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24820168-20140524144205/@comment-24961441-20140524162046

This is quite gripping, I can't wait for what is to come! The ending is a bit abrupt but I understand that you are still working on it.

Good so far, I can't see any huge grammatical errors - just a lower case letter where there shouldn't be here or there - but keep working on it!