Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-23787880-20141018020118/@comment-23787880-20141018154014

Seraph of Flame wrote: Haha, I'm assuming at the end it's supposed to be all fragment sentences? If not, fix that, but I think it is and if so then great job. Benson's purpose was to strip the people it targets of their own conventional illusions and restore them to their true animal selves. In this case, the protagonist is a monster. As he is awakened to his own animal self, he begins to devolve. I was hoping that the fragmented sentence structures towards the end would help show this more effectively.