Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26525489-20170126001929/@comment-26525489-20170126081711

Thanks for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

I think you're absolutely right about the length of the climax. There's not really enough in that moment to illicit such remorse from the character at the end of the story and it doesn't capitalize on the buildup as much as it could. I'm sure I can fill that out a little more, maybe that will make it a little more satisfying. I can play around with the idea of a few more plot points and at least better flesh out the ones I've already included.

As for leaving out the story told to the sherif, that was more for the sake of brevity in the denouement. I didn't want to add too much resolution and overbalance the rest of the story. Since it's already off balance, however, I'll take another look at that after expanding the climax.

There were also quite a few grammatical and spelling errors that escaped my initial review. I'm a little embarrassed to have posted it in such a state. I'll work on correcting some of those as well in the next draft.

Thank you again!