Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3541151-20141214233404/@comment-25827813-20141222134756

It was nice and I enjoyed reading it but you have to fix some formatting errors (like Grizzly Bear said) and also there are some captital letters missing. Starts of sentences need capital letters. :P

Also, all of the characters had the same kind of tone and I don't mean who-do-you-believe-wise, I mean like speech wise. If you had one or so characters who spoke differently to the others, it would seem more realistic. (Spell a few things wrong pr something but only in that character's bits!) Sorry if that idea's silly though.

Also, like Grizzly Bear said, no one would believe an intruder so maybe put in something else a little more believable. (Sorry, no ideas from me.)

Also, phrases like 'surreal encounter' wouldn't be used on a site such as Yahoo Answers... Try something a bit simpler like 'strange meeting' or 'it wasn't normal'.

Good luck!