Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26876932-20160522015729/@comment-4715955-20160527041346

First and foremost, never use realistic phone numbers, especially on the internet. Whoever actually has that number is guaranteed to be harassed endlessly by internet trolls. Always use a 555-XXXX number instead.

I'll be frank and honest with you: only years of studying English and creative writing could possibly improve this to the point where it would be accepted on the wiki, much less on a professional site. Basically, a better writer has to redo the whole thing from scratch, or scrap it altogether.

Plenty of members here will point out little grammatical fixes that need to be made, or suggest an alternate ending, but they're simply not enough to fix bad characters, terrible dialogue, clumsy pacing, and bad ideas/execution in general. And most of the people who provide that feedback are on the same writing level as you or worse, which isn't all that helpful in the long run, unless one of the senior writers comes by and pitches in. Even if all that IS enough, it would take months of critiquing and rewriting: we can't make this a good story overnight, nor make you a better writer overnight. Middle school kids don't really get anything accepted here (or anyplace with quality standards) because they simply don't have the training or experience necessary to tell a good, polished story. That's why they're still in school.

What I recommend doing instead of anxiously trying to get something polished enough to be accepted, is to keep writing new things and posting the best ones here for feedback. It's hard to get peer reviews at school sometimes, and posting them here at least you'll get feedback from people who aren't friends or relatives, and therefore totally objective. Read books instead of creepypasta and fanfiction, and read genres you have no interest in writing. Find any books that even slightly capture your interest and read them. Try copying passages to get a feel for how the author uses words. Read essays about the writing process. Read the writing guides here on the wiki. Read, and experiment with your writing, and post the best results in a writing community that gives good feedback (find one of those communities first, of course).

That's the best thing I can tell you based on what I've read here. Focus on the craft now. Worry about exposure later.