Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20150303214112/@comment-4849011-20150308211205

I enjoyed this. It was interesting to see a different perspective on the first story, and I enjoyed the many tongue-in-cheek comments (such as the joke that two lovers stole the hook hand off some innocent guy). I did notice a handful of minor typos.
 * "Somehow, Kevin managed to get nearly half the camp on the sleepover scheme, as well as some the neighborhood kids," should be "Somehow, Kevin managed to get nearly half the camp on the sleepover scheme, as well as some of the neighborhood kids."
 * “In the far right hand corner directly behind the couch was narrow doorless closet with old toys along the floor and square crawlspace in back,” should be “In the far right hand corner directly behind the couch was a narrow doorless closet with old toys along the floor and square crawlspace in back.”
 * “However, back in my buzzkill logical universe, stalking like cannibalism and inbreeding is heavily frowned upon in much of the civilized world,” should be “However, back in my buzzkill logical universe, stalking, like cannibalism and inbreeding is heavily frowned upon in much of the civilized world.”
 * "Geez Louis, Kevin, I thought as I wrinkled my brow in bafflement," should be "Geez Louise, Kevin, I thought as I wrinkled my brow in bafflement."