Talk:Silent Spring/@comment-25941663-20180807130249

I have two technical issues with the story:

"The California condor is not known to occur in Missouri." - I am not sure 'occur' is the correct word for this. Maybe something like 'inhabit Missouri'?

Some of the images are pretty low quality and kind of detract from the story.

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I am not that used to this type of stories, so I can't really provide much feedback. It was an enjoyable read, but nothing particularly exciting.

Use of Silence: An interesting take on the theme. It was a central part of the story and intriguing as a concept. Unfortunately, due to the nature of the story, we don't get up close and personal with the concept. The whole story is basically the opposite of "show, don't tell", due to its nature. Still, silence was a driving force behind this story, so I give it a 70/100.

Originality: This is a pretty new way of telling a story. Very intriguing and I am left wanting more. 100/100

Fear Factor: I can't say this was particularly creepy, I'm afraid. It was a pretty interesting read and I am left wanting more, but it's more out of curiosity than fear. If this was extended into a proper hunt for this creature, where the creature was seemingly moving closer to the researchers (maybe even hunting them, a couple of "accidents" here and there) this would have been really, really good. At the moment, it's a bit average on that department. 45/100

Overall, 215/300.