Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26511696-20150619171000/@comment-24101790-20150619192157

There are multiple issues present in the story so I am only going to grab a few examples of each rather than everything. These are only a few of the issues that led to your story's deletion for not being up to quality standards.

Wording issues: "I have, for all my life, lead (led) a privileged life", "As a result of this self-induced alienation I found my self (myself) hanging out with a select group of weirdos in the class who, appose (opposed/rather than) to playing foot ball outside in the sun,", "To night (Tonight) I'm going to film myself sleep and watch over the footage in the morning." Redundancies: "despite my dismissal of such sites I was still rather apprehensive when they suggested to me that we try one of the spells out. Despite my apprehensions"

Punctuation: apostrophes missing from contractions ("Ill", "cant", "Im", apostrophes missing from words denoting possession: "friend(')s house", Commas lacking from sentences indicating a pause in flow. Try reading the story aloud to yourself and these should stand out quite a bit.

Grammar: it's=it is, its=possession. "Its (It's) getting late now" their=possession, there=indicatory, they're=they are. " into there group quite readily" your=possession, you're=you are. ",and know (no) its (it's) not what your (you're) thinking"

As for the story, there are some pretty big issues here. The "I don't have a lot of time (, but I'm going to write everything rather than attempt to flee.)" style of the story doesn't work. Especially in light of the ending: "The foot steps are nearly at the door now...... oh god....." Was the protagonist writing that last entry as the creature slowly approached. If so, how slow is that creature and why exactly is the protagonist writing that message (and then uploading it) as opposed to running?