Talk:Jessica Makes Your Favorites/@comment-25458443-20180418212240

There are a few themes spiraling around here that don't recieve their justice, in my opinion. The narrator says they're "slightly addicted to youtube videos" but nothing really seems to come from that detail and it comes across as a little strange in my opinion. The story obviously implies that it was the act of watching the video that sparked their insatiable hunger, but why do we focus so little on the video? We get some scant descriptions of Jessica herself, then she gives her short speech about food, and our narrator is off for the fences! I would have liked to see our narrator's gradual descent into obsession be more gradual, maybe over a couple videos, because as is it just wasn't very creepy. The twist comes too much out of nowhere, imo. Perhaps we read about more and more videos, starting with baked potatoes and slowly expanding into meats and then Jessica herself suggests human meat as a good substitute, or even makes a whole video about cooking and preparing human?

As is, it's a nice creepy idea with more merit than the execution, imo.