Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26342384-20150609222623/@comment-26030957-20150611173244

I don't get it. Am I missing something here? How did Mr. Jones create the monster? Is this a reference to the Bob Dylan song? I think you need to flesh this out some more. Remember that story is character. Who is this Mr. Jones? How old is he? What does he do for a living? What does he want from life? What is his family life like? You've got to get us emotionally invested in the story. There is some good writing here but you need to work on character and story, get that imagination pumping.