Talk:A Figure in the Fog/@comment-25052433-20150417190727/@comment-25148755-20150417220158

Thanks for the in depth feedback, Banning! I really appreciate the time and effort. Glad you liked the story!

As far as the tone of the dialogue eh. In my mind Jamie and Morgan are in the 15-16 range. I know what you meant, but I don't think the differences would be all that extreme. I definitely tried to make Lester sound like more of a little kid but the other two are young adults. Guess I still need to refine my technique to better make that distinction lol.