Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20190418144550/@comment-35711173-20190418155641

Solonor,

This one definitely needs work to get to minimum English standards. Sorry. Hold on posting it until people in the Workshop say it is ready to go.

Below is an instant automatic clean-up from Grammarly Free. You still have many other errors. https://www.scribens.com shows that the story is almost entirely run-on sentences.

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A little boy was born on Easter day of 1900 his parents were proud to have a beautiful little boy, but yet they notice that there was something not normal his eyes were Red and Grey, the doctors could not explain this phenomenon.

"This is really strange," said Castiel’s father, "Why he is not strange he is perfect," said Castiel’s mother, because she saw nothing strange with her son. Castiel had grown up over the years, yet growing up his parents could see that his teeth were sharp, Of course, it makes his village talk because they think it was weird and Castiel was very uncomfortable.

"Why does everyone look at me like that" said Castiel to his mother "Because you are different and the difference for some people it scares them" said his mother, they walked in the village Castiel hears someone say something about him "You see the teeth of this monster" Castiel feels his heart bounce in his chest he was so sad.

When they go back to their house Castiel felt not very well, he wanted to go out without saying a word and what he does by opening the door and goes out. The next day Castiel wakes up in his bed not remembering what happened the day before, he decides to get up and when he looks at himself in the mirror of his room he starts screaming he was covered in blood. His mother and father come into the room and watch him terrify, "Castiel what’s going on, how did you do that" said his mother, "I don’t know" said Castiel worried, "It’s all right, don’t worry, you just have to change" says his father.

Castiel and his mother go to the village in the morning only to hear people talking going to buy fruit, "You heard, there was a murder last night," said a village woman, "I heard Martha and her family were killed by a Cannibal," said another woman. "And no one knows who committed this crime," said a man, everyone in the village was worried.

Shocked Castiel and his mother return home, rumors about Castiel started circulating in the village. People started to see him as a monster that devours people, Castiel was really sad because nobody trusted him his heart was broken. Once again Castiel went out without saying anything to his parents, the same drama happens again he wakes up covered in blood and he does not remember anything.

This time Castiel went alone to the village, people looked at him and they were not very happy to see him, a woman approaches and says "There he is, the monster who killed Joseph and his family", people look at Castiel and insult him. Castiel got scared and said, "I’m not a monster," but the kids see him and they all say, "Yes, you are, you are a monster go away."

After having been beaten Castiel returned home and was furious, his mother and father wanted to ask him what was going on, but he passed in front of them without a word and went to his room, Castiel no longer understood anything that happened to him-When he looked in the mirror he had a shock. Looking at himself he saw that his skin had turned orange with a black vein on his chin, that’s when he understood what he had done and his eyes were blood red, Castiel had a bad laugh and said: "They want a monster, I’ll give them one."

As he approached a Castiel house looking out the window, a family was having dinner for Easter, a woman named Selma and mother of three children Gabriel, Joseph and Edith, her husband was sitting there with them. All went well, when Selma heard the basement door open and close as if someone had walked in, "You heard that," Selma asked, "It’s probably just the wind." told her husband, But Selma was not so sure and she got up to see where the noise was coming from.

So she went to the basement to see if anyone had entered the house, Selma approached the door and opened it, but she saw no one, she wondered if her husband was right that it was just the wind, when she turned to go up she saw Castiel in front of her, "Happy Easter" said Castiel and killed her. Concerned Selma’s family go down to the basement, when they find the body and who’s in the house, they look at the creature that turns over covered in blood and of course go after them they start screaming after Castiel went back to his house he was no longer the same.

When his mother saw him she asked him "Where were you, and why are you covered in blood", Castiel raises his head and his mother sees that he has become a monster and goes to see her husband, she says then "Joshua takes your gun or he will kill us "Castiel sees his father with the gun and says, "Well, Father, you’re not happy to see me."

His horrified father started shooting at him, but Castiel fled to the forest and all his parents hear is his laughter, they know that Castiel will not stop and is waiting for new victims.