Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25089712-20140621173512/@comment-25089712-20140623191300

Okay, those examples help a lot with what I should do about how I word my sentences. I have trouble with making the sentences actual sentences, like I can form pieces of it but when it comes to putting them together I am terrible!

Beginning my sentences with "and" or "but" is definitely something I do a lot. Sometimes it just feels right though, but I know it isn't very grammatically correct so I have to convince myself to take them out.

I have also made a sort of plot outline for what I hope to accomplish and explain in each paragraph or section of the story. I am really disappointed about the Slenderman thing though. I really wanted to explore the whole proxy thing because the idea of someone slowly having control over their body taken away from them seemed like a creepy one. Do you think if I made some tweaks to the character and didn't use the actual name Slenderman it could stay up? I don't know a lot about the rules on this wiki but I wonder if they are different for the creepypasta website.

I have found a purpose for the nameless man too. I think he will serve as some kind of warning or protection for her. Like how she didn't have the same nightmare she always had that made her wake up screaming. Instead she felt awake and well rested. I have added a bit more interaction with him as well. I think I have gotten the vague thing taken care of. The plot outline I made helps me stick to the main idea a lot. Thank you very much for the additional help!