Talk:Menagerie/@comment-33005042-20180222141343

'''Although not particularly well executed, this could easily become a good read if you clean up some of the wacky tense shifts, proofread the thing, and maybe switch out the generic creepypasta monster for something else. Maybe a mirror image of herself or something similar?'''

 (Also, it sounds like she’s like 10, so why does she have exes? Just a little nitpick (and if she OD'd, why does she have scars on her wrists?))

Overall, 6/10, but with some changs could easily be a solid 7-7.5/10.