Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26423665-20150604190112/@comment-17118109-20150726213733

Taking a second (more like seventh) look at it, I think the quandary sentence should be fine as it is now.

For the last one, I was going off how it "sounded" in my head. Commas mean pauses, and that sentence certainly doesn't sound proper (out loud or in the head) with no pauses whatsoever. I probably did add too many commas, but I would at least still leave one before "so."