Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5614678-20160909101713/@comment-5614678-20160909153125

@ChristianWallis I wanted to keep this story short and simple, but I understand that the basicness of the narrative might end up making it much less exciting.

I'm thinking of adding a "punch" to the ending. Some kind of nice little twist or punchline to really make the story more entertaining.