Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33531395-20171101114421/@comment-32764586-20171101231005

A major problem I found was that the ending was abrupt and had no real explanation. Not every story needs an explanation, but this one gave use no hints to make our own assumptions. So it feels like a wasted time reading it at the end.

It's also weird that all these unexplained things happen like a pen appearing in thin air, and then he doesn't question it. It just doesn't seem like a natural reaction.