Talk:Don't Worry, You Are Safe Now/@comment-5733573-20180605005651

I'm afraid this story makes no sense. You introduce a possibly scary situation, but then it goes absolutely nowhere and there's no explanation for any of it. On top of that, many of the sentences and word choices are extremely awkward. I really hope you take this one back to the drawing board, because with more work put into it, it could be an interesting story.