Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33077235-20180922174343/@comment-33077235-20180922180153

EmpyrealInvective wrote: Is there a reason why this is a separate thread? Keep everything condensed into a single post rather than violate the forum rules by flooding it with the same story multiple times.

As for your question, I'd focus on the story issues other users pointed out in the other threads (there's a reason why keeping everything in a single post is best for both authors and reviewers). Someone helped me redo it and I edited it a little more. So that's why it's a new post not trying to break any rules. :)