Talk:The Cabin with the Red Light/@comment-35711173-20190401230931/@comment-35711173-20190402020732

Evan, I know part of it is the initial description in the first paragraph. You looked inwards for the description of the world around you. (fair skin, curly auburn hair, young). A "male" writer would describe outwards, where they are, with sounds and smells.

Fight or flight. Men fight, women flee. If I were imprisoned by a person larger and stronger than I was, I would kill them. I would find something to use, even a hammer or a kitchen knife. Once I had them down, I would make sure they were dead. If I had other reasons why I couldn't kill him, I would have left him immobilized and severely wounded, hopefully with the place on fire so the smoke inhalation would also get him.

If I am going to flee, a padlock on a door isn't going to stop me. Even if it did, I'd go out the window.

If a man thinks he is about to be in a fight, he is going to be looking for something to fight with. A forest would have many good branches to use as clubs. Your protagonist never mentioned any weapon.

You described the clothes of the hero.

To sound even more feminine, I would have mentioned her dress (along with the material and color) in that opening paragraph. Ditto for more emphasis on the clothes of the hero and the villain.

Here are some hopefully helpful notes on various free spell and grammar checking web sites.

User_blog:DrBobSmith/Basic_Spell_and_Grammar_Checking