Talk:Sunset Dawn/@comment-28428152-20180320232752

I hate to be a drag, but this was extremely difficult to read, as there doesn't seem to be much regard to grammar. I can understand wanting to write in a vague, almost surreal style, but this is so taken so far that it's difficult to understand what's going on. Plus there's a lot of punctuation and tense error. And no real identification of characters.