Talk:Too Late for Tony/@comment-25941663-20150214111937

I liked this pasta a lot. Especially the desparation you conveyed at the part where Jon tried to get help for his friend. That was top-notch and you had me at the edge of my seat.

After that, the pasta lost steam and became kinda uninteresting. It was not bad, not at all, but it could have been better. For me, it seemed as if you wanted to wrap this up quickly and didn't know exactly how, so you resorted to cramming in as much stuff you could. The part about the computer and the TV is unnecessary. The story would have been better off without it. You could have extended the dream sequence to include the Tony-possesses-Jon plot instead.

Overally, it was a nice read. You showed a lot of potential and I would certainly be keeping tabs on your future stories. Well done.