Talk:Sempiternal/@comment-24304936-20140225184611

I was going to go through and edit this, but there are some issues.

One reason I didn't is because there are many run-on sentences that I was afraid that, if I fragmented them, would change the meaning of what you were trying say.

Example:

''"I was walking down the street going to our usual place to get a beer with them, and I decided to go to the store to buy a pack of cigarettes, when I was in the line to pay, looking at all the people there, looking the way they dressed, their faces, gestures, etc, in between the crowd I saw a familiar face, a face that I know I've seen before but not sure where, "maybe I saw him in the street some other day" I thought so I didn't payed too much attention." ''

''This could easily be broken down into 3, maybe four sentences i.e. its own paragraph. ''Speaking of paragraphs, you need to put them where they are needed.

There are also some spelling and grammar issues.

Don't take what I said as a bash either. Just trying to help, man. :)