Talk:Never Sleep, Never Wake/@comment-24281984-20141125010455

This story was alright. The setup for the ending was actually rather well-done, although the conclusion itself was sadly lacking. Also, why was there a perspective change before it? It seems to me that this story may have made more sense written all in third person, and a second character could have served the purpose as the reader in the last few sentences.

All this aside, there was also a great deal of grammar, punctuation and spacing errors that I fixed. Please make sure to proofread your stories before submitting them, as the editor only finds spelling mistakes.