Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29174113-20160720052335/@comment-29015383-20160720143841

Look no further, the workshop is here to help! I'm still at work so I can't look your story over right now, though I think Empy probably touched on most if not all points. If you take his suggestions in account and either update the first post or add a reply (to this topic! Don't make a new one!) with the new version, I'd be more than happy to take a stab at it for you. My assists mostly come in regards to characters and story though, as English is not my first language and I haven't read enough creepypasta yet to catch all the generic/cliché parts.