Talk:The Monsters' Party/@comment-32802129-20170808052926

There are a few things that stand out to me here:

1) Every story needs a beginning, middle and end. There is very little development of a storyline here, and development is what keeps people reading.

2) The monsters portrayed here are very cliche Hollywood in their descriptions which makes the idea feel like it's not unique.

3) Why does your character do anything he does? As readers we can't just accept being invited to a monster gathering and casually eating human flesh and drinking blood. There needs to be a reason for someones' actions that is somewhat plausible.

4) I'm not sure where the strangling twist comes from. The blob makes your character do things, but Sharron is not at the party. Did your character strangle her before? Seems out of place.

Don't get me wrong, I am not trying to tell you you're bad at writing. I just don't think this particular pasta has had enough development put in to engage with the reader and leave them thinking about your pasta later. I really like your idea of being invited to something reserved for the dead/unworldly as a human and I feel with a bit more thought and structure you could write a seriously good pasta on that idea.