Talk:The Theater/@comment-5455908-20141225225332

It was worth the read, but i feel like you built up a lot to an ending with no "boom". Personally I think maybe going for something traumatic happening to the players afterward, both in-game and then outside of it. You started with this, (the swirly head man being in the corner of your vision), but it honestly didn't leave me scared. Spelling and Grammar were worth noting though, always nice to see someone who cares about that! I would give it an 8/10, not only for its good writing, but also its potential to spur another story... Perhaps an adult player of the game plays again, and repressed memories come flooding back before he smashes the CD, and Swirly head man comes after him once more, driving him into a slow madness that he could never come out of... almost like the game. Which could always use another Ticket-Taker...