Talk:Standing in the Rain/@comment-3541151-20150216005121


 * Facepalm.

Wow. The grammatical errors are really annoying and need to be handled before publication. I mean, it makes it hard to read.

Language Arts 101:  Periods are used to take proper pauses. Without proper pauses, BUILDUP can't take effect, and the rush of reading ruins the effect!

The story has some neat aspects, but it feels too rushed to. While you had a neat Ghost Story envisioned, the execution (no pun inten- no wait, that was funny! I intend it!) is terrible and makes the read tedious.

If not for creativity, it would have no points. 2/10