Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20150110000358/@comment-24101790-20150110162803

Thanks. I added onto the opening line, hopefully that will clear it up a little. (If not, it's a bit of self-deprecating humor and has little impact on the story as a whole that might help the reader get a feel for the protagonist.)

The second line was a typo, thanks for catching that.

I'm still up for anyone's suggestions on how to improve this story or lines that took issue with.