Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28770958-20160916100725/@comment-28770958-20160916193941

I see. You have effectively  ripped me apart, this is just a test to see what fits and what doesn't. I appreciate the feedback and criticism, I will be writing  this over many times until I can find a combination  that is smooth enough. It feels rushed you say? perhaps, but there are many things not meant to explained in this installment. I agree that I should  step back a bit, propèrly explain how certain  things came to be fore gettijg into the rest, but I will have to do so in a way that evens everything  out. Withoutt giving away the overall full plot not meant to be revealed just yet. Understand?