Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20160628193135/@comment-28420405-20160628205206

I truly enjoyed this story. I agree with the poster above and you use of semicolons. Perhaps try playing around with alternate punctuation to help the flow of the story.

Beyond those style choices, however, I have nothing to critique. Out of the multiple stories I've read recently, this one is one of the best. It's length is perfect, your language use is excellent, and the cliffhanger ending left me wanting more.

I also enjoyed that you chose animal masks. Those are freaky on their own, but having them be deformed under the masks really made my imagination run wild. I had all sorts of sick ideas of how they got that way, and I think letting the reader use their imagination helped up the creep-factor tenfold.

I am really looking forward to reading more of your work! This was clever, fresh, and well written. Excellent job, keep it up!