Talk:Commence Lockdown/@comment-35711173-20190510194408

You are effective in making us know what is coming without saying what it is and giving a novel perspective on it, the dog's.

You have several rough English language spots. "She stepped into the human-sized cage that her father had fashioned with iron in his shop." Fashioning with iron implies iron as a tool, like the cage was ironed together using a clothes iron. Also, wouldn't it logically be steel?

I could tell you more if you are interested. Try reading the story out loud a few times to feel if you can find rough areas. I can also help with some free tools.