Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36113436-20180707230013/@comment-7064562-20180709041503

I think the main issue is the story makes absolutely zero sense and has no point to it what so ever. The butterfly effect meaning a butterfly flaps it's wings and a tornado happens, isn't as simples as that. Think of it more as setting things in motion. A chain of events, going from simplistic, to unclear insantity. Such a thing can lead to an interesting story, but all you're doing is making a list of random ideas that lead to panic. There's no real substance or point to it.

- In 2023 the human population will drastically grow due to the events of 9/11.

Ok, how? How does point A effect point B. Than you give us point Z of people eating each other.

This is a story. It's not the reader's job to make it up in there head.

On top of that, you go from the future predictions, to the present ones of him dying. Seems like overkill shock value for no real reason. Stating the future is completely fucked is kind of enough.

You kind of said it yourself "Then the predictions got either insane, unclear or both. " Good idea, not really a good exacution.