Talk:Rainbow Factory/@comment-26814116-20150723231818

It's not really scary, but it can be a bit unnerving. Other than that, it's a well-written and fairly enjoyable story.

My only real criticism is with the characters. I mean, you've got a believable mix between OCs and the show's characters, but their personalities aren't fleshed out enough. Relationships aren't developed enough, so it's hard for the audience to care. Another thing, I'm not sure teenagers talk like that. I mean, I do, but most of my friends don't usually talk like that (unless they're being funny).

My ranking? I'd give this a B. Good overall, but it has a few faults that could've been fixed.