Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25024572-20151103175308/@comment-25024572-20151103183148

AlwaysStayIrrelevant wrote: I think its a little too micro xD. I feel that the only person it might unnerve is the type of person that is already highly arachnophobic. It's a little funny that the first thought going though the persons mind is, "I wont be able to complain to my landlord about spiders.. It appears I am going to die". It could be difficult for spiders to crawl out of a drain with all the water going down, especially since they are probably small spiders (unless the drain is just an open hole as appose to a grate). I think it could be better if a spider fell down to the persons feet first. Then the water would to come to a halt and the person messes with the little water control knob thing. When that doesn't work he messes with the shower head when suddenly the end piece (the part that makes a single stream of water into a bunch of little streams) pops off and he is being showered with thousands of little spiders.

I appologize for the simple worded description im giving, I didn't spend anytime looking up the names for everything, but it's your story so you can do the research xD. All in all, this might be able to fit into a few lines of text. I could write something up, but then it would be my pasta influenced by you :P.

You do make a lot of good points, and the idea of spiders falling down actually works a bit better, plus having a swarm of them pop out that way sounds much more disturbing.

Thank you for your feedback.