Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180719080645/@comment-5101683-20180720065342

You asked me to review this story. I tried to find things definitively wrong with it and couldn't.

I guess maybe you could get rid of the last paragraph or the second-to-last sentence, because I don't really know what the protagonists' glancing back at the carnage is supposed to convey exactly inasmuch as it doesn't add new information.

This story is interesting, the way it's written is engaging, and the ending is satisfying. I'm not entirely sure how you can improve this from a story point of view (maybe you can, but if so, then I don't know how).