Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26027963-20150428125106/@comment-24450775-20150428150352

My critique is on the story itself, and I hope you don't take this wrong. Its not creepy. It reads more like the end of an action film. This story is about the end of the world, yes? So its basically a disaster story. No problem there.

Describe to us how the world has changed. What are people driven to do to survive? What is the general living for? If he's suicidal (and the end suggested that to me) then play on that more. There is a lot you can do with this idea.