Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26248322-20150327010136/@comment-26231637-20150329204955

I am sort of confused on why the title of this piece is called "To Be, or Not to Be" when there isn't a question like that inside the story. It should be something along the lines of "Should I, or Should I Not" since he is questioning if he should shoot the girl or not. Though, I do like the detail in which you go into this. Might I also mention that I do enjoy the ending because it leaves the readers guessing what happens.

I also love how you made the girl out to be this brave hearted (slightly suicidial) person that stands up to the man that has the gun. It went against what I assume would happen to her. I thought for sure that she would go off screaming or crying while begging for her life. Though, I sort of guessed that there was something off about her when she was trying to feel for a pulse in Lucas body when it is clear that he is dead from the gunshot wound.

The fact that this is told in the killer's POV is a good idea. There aren't many stories out there in which the killer is displayed first thing in the story. You pulled that off well. Though, I am curious as to why the killer is in the house? How did he get in? Maybe you should include that in the story. You could do something really neat by describing how he walks casually into the house, and lead the reader to believe that he is the owner. Those are always good ways to begin a Creepypasta story.