Talk:Text-Based Hell/@comment-26948042-20151123072601

"When I took the disk to him, I had to ask him, where he got that COMPLETER disk from, he had a serious look on his face and told me, that he found the disk, while looking around an abandoned house when he was away on holiday, a house believed to be built on an ancient burial ground."

How are there, six comments, and none point out, your use of, the "Walken Comma," all over, the story? You need less, commas and more, periods. The entire, story is nearly, one sentence at, this point. (Was that annoying to read? So was the story.) I liked the actual plot though.