Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26027963-20150218171422/@comment-25975226-20150219055701

CrazyWords wrote:

MrTacocat nation banana wrote: this is seriously fucked up. dude. this is just wrong. *shivers* anyways you have so many spelling errors it isn't even funny. also...no i can't think of anything else. I changed the spelling errors, and I know how messed up it is.

You haven't changed all of the spelling errors, and this pasta isn't really creepy or relatable I have to say. The thing about ritual pastas is that they are meant to be achievable by the reader, leaving the reader with an afterthought of 'maybe I should try-no, don't be stupid'. (If you know what I mean) The problem with this one is that it relies heavily on gore, and is completely unnachievable. If you changed the ritual to make it easier to achieve, 'How to make a Living Doll' sounds scary enough. It has potential, and I don't want to see it die. Please just make it more realistic and less gory.