Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24914789-20141009172011/@comment-24821182-20141009185803

This wouldn't make our quality standards even if you corrected the myriads of grammatical errors. It basically follows the same formula as AND THEN A SKELETON POPPED OUT, and just like in that trollpasta there's no build-up to the shocking thing happening, and there's zero explanation as to how the skeleton ended up there in the first place. It's really cliché and uninventive. Maybe you could somehow take this idea and do something creative with it, but I think it'd be better if you tried writing something else.

Now, as to correcting those grammatical errors:

The one-letter word "I" must always be capitalized. You must always capitalize the first letter of a sentence, as well. You misspelled "uncle", "couldn't", "fifteen", and "our". There's also an overall lack of commas; remember to put a comma whenever you would pause while reading a sentence aloud. Finally, this chunk of text should be split into easily digestible paragraphs.

Now, to be fair, this is your first creepypasta. I can also guess by the content of the story that English isn't your native language. I suggest you try hanging around the wiki while also learning some basic grammar. As for the content of your stories, we have a number of Writing Advice blogs to help writers like yourself improve, and I recommend you read them.