Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-1284417-20150728030509/@comment-26475253-20150728041536

Meowjar wrote: JohnathanNash wrote: This story was deleted because of a few issues:

First, you need to spell out the numbers, don't use the number your the word. An example of this is "The 2 were constantly staring across the river and felt as if something or someone was watching them." Secondly, it didn't really have a twist ending or any real ending besides the people were killed.

Third, you went from writing in first person to third person. You can't do that in writing. and example of this is "our car SABER," you later decided to drop that you were there and made it just about them. There is one other time where you said we, but I couldn't find it.

If you fix those problems this would be a better story, but the ending needs some work. Well Like I said sir, I'm new at this Horror stuff, I'm mostly writing stories on War, or Animate vehicles :/ but thanks for the advice thought :) Um. Like, Horror, War, and Animate don't need to be capitalized. Um. Hmm... Try to take like a writer's class or something, they can be found at colleges and libraries. It might help.