Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26006009-20150303090906/@comment-24976741-20150303215021

SOURCECODE01 wrote: The grammar isn't the best, but the main problem is with the plot. To be frank, there is none. You need to explain further because this isn't creepy. If you had a longer pasta, I might be abele to help you a bit more, but with such a short story, I can't. I just can't

Also, again Silver Dark, what is with the "death note?" I don't like to discuss things off topic here since this isn't a chat room, but the Death Note is possible one of the most clever and deadly objects to kill someone with, if it was real. It's also the name of the anime which is a couple of years old, but still is very comparable to modern day animes because Mad House did the animations for it, which are splended. I've just been recently rewatching it so that's why I've mentioned it as a joke before.