Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26272407-20150403193741/@comment-25170312-20150408160043

I read about a third of it before I couldln't go on. I'm assuming english is not your first language, because there are a slew of incorrect pronouns. For example, you mix up 'him' and 'her'. You also use the word 'great' to mean 'tall', but it doesn't make sense in the context. These are just a few examples, but the grammar is so bad that I can't possibly go over them all. As for the plot, there really isn't any. You tell us in the title that it's a guy with iron teeth, then people describe encounters with him. There's no mystery, no unknown. Maybe if there was something interesting going on, I could have finished it and maybe gotten into the grammar a little more with you, but it's not worth it based on what I've read so far.