Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10869901-20140523042158/@comment-24101790-20140523051913

I just read the story and agree with Resident DeVir. There are some capitalization (I and a failure to capitalize at the start of a few sentences.), spelling ("forrest"), and grammatical errors (You leave off the apostrophe on a few possessive words "kids mother" should be kid's mother. etc.) The catch-phrase seems non-sensical and the story seems to be a knock-off. If I came across this posted on the wiki, I would probably delete it outright. I would recommend writing this out if you're a fan of it, but not posting it to the wiki. (I have a number of stories written out that I feel are not up to equality standards for this site.)

After completing this story, I would recommend maybe trying out writing another type/genre of story as killer pastas do not have a very long shelf-life here.