Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20161223041039/@comment-24101790-20161223042048

I'm sorry, but this isn't really enough to give much in the way of impressions. This is basically a character and scenery introduction. I'll try to do my best, but I'm pretty limited here.

Awkward lines: "Sweat constantly dripped from her forehead down below the soften (soft), moist ground" Do you mean 'down onto'? "Caring little regard about the chills which ran across her entire body, Evelyn maintained her knelling position and simply brushed off any snow that latched onto her." Showing/Giving little regard is probably better than 'caring little regard' as I haven't seen caring little regard used before.

"Sneezing profusely, the thought of turning and heading back crossed her mind; even if her goal wasn't achieved today, surely she preferred not to slowly freeze to death out in the open." It feels like you should include something in regards to her goal as mentioning it there and not elaborating on it feels like a component is missing. We get clues by her camo, but it feels a bit obscure not to drop any hints.

"Fearing the scent trail will (would) soon disperse into the atmosphere; she quicken (quickened) her pace."

That's really all I can give you at this time as this really seems more like scenery and introduction rather than premise and objectives.