Talk:Necrosleep/@comment-26011836-20150209023220

Ok so i've read the story and here's what i have to say:

Pros: 


 * The plot is straightfoward and easy to follow. It doesn't feel like anything much was added to pad out the story or make it unnnessearily complex.


 * The suspense and tension from the events of the story were well paced and by putting it into "Journal" form, it does transition from one event to the next quite smoothly.


 * I do find the concept of a person slowly going insane from medication rather interesting and could've been even more awesome with a bit of retooling.

Cons: 

* The use of things such as the number 666 and "Satanic" symbols really take me out of the story and warrented an audible "UGH!". I feel like they were added in for the sake of adding them in, which feels rather unnessesary and could've been replaced with something more creative or subtle.


 * I feel like this story could've been more tolerable if the following had been done:

1) The protaganist or anybody else in the story was given a bit more character development and thus making the events in the story have a greater impact on the audience.

2) If there was added mystery to the whole "Necrosleep" website or even a bit more psychological horror at the end. (i.e Make it ambiguous whether or not the events in the story really happened.)

However, since that is not the case, it felt really difficult for me to finish the story seeing as how the "Satan" cliches prevented me from really getting into the story.


 * From what i understand, this seems to be a second rate version of "Psychosis". Why? Well the best way i can describe it is just imagine Psychosis if it was injected with more "Satanic" cliches, over the top gore, increased plot predictability, and a host of other things. I know i said i liked the concept of this story but the connection is just too blatent to ignore.

Granted this isn't the worst Creepypasta i've read *coughs* Donald&Douglas1 *coughs* but this one really dissapointed me. It does have potential to be a great story, but the execution is just really flimsy.