Talk:Misfortune.gb/@comment-24739953-20140326233819

I am sorry to say, but I didn't like this one at all.

First, it's really short and lacks details. It analyzes the game in a very sterile way before going into the afterthoughts,  which makes it sound far less interesting and too detached. The fact that the narrator wasn't involved with it makes it even more vague. The detail of it being embedded inside another games is also something that you can easily miss, as it's not really expanded upon, or showing differences between different "versions" of it. Besides, it even clashes with the title of the pasta, given that it's the name a regular non-hidden-in-another-game ROM would have.

The game itself looks entirely harmless as well. Even if it's a cursed game it's just too...normal. Some ADORABLE little devil guy saying "I am god here" is actually something that happens in normal games, so it's as threatening as it saying it wants a hug. It looks adorably boastful rather than intimidating. At least give it a frown or something, it's just too cute. The sprite also has a reversed hand, the pointy finger is always the closest one to your center. Maybe it's intentional, but I fail to see any symbolism on it. Otherwise it'd be like it's pointing with its pinky, which makes it even cuter.

The final part with the story about the other guy is more interesting than the rest, but still really short and lacking detail too.

I'd totally drop the "sectioned" review of the game's music, gameplay, etc, and make it a more detailed general description that sounds less like it's some sort of SCP thingy. Make it more involving for the narrator,  as well, so we can see what is wrong with it.

That said I don't think it's vile or anything, but needs much more involvement. Everything sounds too detached and sterile.