Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160605121157/@comment-28266772-20160608160731

I really enjoyed the story. I picked out three errors,

"yesterday I have woken up to an unnerving realization" -> should be "yesterday I woke up".

" In spun menacingly" -> should be "it spun menacingly"

And at one point you spell "precise" as "precice".

So overall I really enjoyed this story. But I do think the heart of it is the idea that a lock could keep you in with a threat, as much as it could keep you safe from a threat. So you could easily change it to be anything other than a guy/serial killer and still keep the core of the story the same. This would hopefully address empy's criticism, without you needing to change the heart of things.

Also I like the idea of someone struggling to keep a monster out, night after night, trying to make sure this old lock doesn't just pop open and let stuff in, only to realize the monster had been inside the whole time. A slug trail is a great idea, but pretty much anything inhuman would be a good choice because it would differentiate it from the usual affair. This would also let you get rid of the police coming to the house, which slows the pace down between the point where the protagonist realizes they were being watched, and the final climax where they are chased throughout the house.

But I did enjoy this story, and I thought it was well written and enjoyable.