Board Thread:Site Questions/@comment-4952988-20151121185705/@comment-24101790-20151127190809

DEFSeattle wrote: Do you mean deleted like every one of my stories, because that's true but I don't know maybe I do just suck at writing, or has everyone gotten their stories deleted lately?

Your most recent story was deleted because it fell below our quality standards. This wiki has increased its standards due to the fact that we get a lot more stories submitted than we did a few years ago (around ten and thirty on a daily basis). Rather than let the wiki be flooded with hastily written/poorly written stories as we have in the past, we have taken to deleting the ones that aren't up to snuff as per community input. Onto the issues present in your most recent story:

Run on sentences: “What’s important is that back then the fog was much thicker; it’s hard for me to tell if there really was a thinning as I walked or if I’ve grown used to it; I’ve grown a power of some kind to see past the fog, or maybe there was simply nothing for miles and no matter the thickness I’d never see a difference.”, “The air was the odd kind that’s wet but because of how cold it is and the wind with it, though weaker than a toothpick, seemed to dry and prick at your skin like one, but of course it felt like many more than one toothpick was sticking you. While I could only see about five or ten paces in front of me,(also, should be a period)”.

Run on sentence continued.: “I can’t see myself having a life other than this one, I live and breathe the vision of that child, and what she said to me, and what those figures looked like, what they would have done had I not helped her; what actually happened to her, because I was too late.” A majority of these sentences would be much better broken down into two or more sentences. Try reading them aloud for clarification. They come off as very cumbersome and needlessly dense.

Redundancy issues: avoid re-using phrases/words multiple times in the same sentence. “frail creature, a creature that looked”, “a reason to walk, though it is so cold and damp, the reason”, “moved arguably slower than she had been moving”, etc. Avoid repeating multiple words multiple times as it really breaks the flow of a story.

Wording issues: “Well, however many days, weeks, months, years, minutes, seconds, ago it was” Typically you go in order from shortest to longest rather than randomly in these scenarios.

Punctuation issues: ““Please, help me,(.)” Her voice was oddly calm””, “…paces in front of me,(should be a period)” Apostrophes incorrectly used. Grammar: it’s=it is, its=possession. “It’s walk”, “it’s knees.”, etc. Capitalization issues: ““They’re after me.” she (She) pointed behind her.” Those are two separate lines like this sentence: “ “I’ll always remember you.” She sat up…”

Story issues: there really needs to be more description of the pursuing entities to give this story a creepy feel. Without it, it just comes off as vague. This doesn’t build up a good mystery for who they are or why they’re walking/what those creatures are, it just takes out points that would have made the story more interesting/involving. This story needs quite a bit of re-working as it currently has a lot of issues.