Talk:Something Is Wrong/@comment-26054278-20150711174501

I congratulate you on being read by CreepsMcPasta. This is most certainly a worthy story (although I think a reading of Broken Mirrors needs to happen some day).

I know I said I'd review this story and talk about how good the characters are, how a couple sections of the story did need to be lingered on for a bit longer, how genuinely disturbing it is, but honestly, pretty much everyone else has said what needs to be said about originally.

I guess my main point of difference that stops it from going on my favorites is that while the concept is originally, I felt not only that one section that Humboldt mentioned should have been longer, but I also felt that a large majority of the sections of this story could have used another sentence or two or elaboration just to make the pacing stronger and tie everything together.

As it is, it is still an excellent read. Great characters, quite disturbing, barely any typos or errors, what more can I say? 8.5/10.