Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26705150-20150906173429/@comment-26705150-20150915184227

MrDupin wrote:

1. I hadn't thought of a name yet, hence the X.

2. I still want to try out this premise, but in a different way probably. I could make it as set in the future or have somebody sabatodge the portal. Maybe I could even turn it into a more Lovecraftian style story. I don't think that this being set in the future would work. Maybe the sabotage one would, but it would have to be more intrigue-centered than this. The Lovecraft idea sounds interesting, but it depends on what you mean by it.

Anyway, in order for this idea to work, it would need to be a lot more fleshed out. You would need to at least triple the size of this, considering you need to add character development, some creepy/unsettling happenings, maybe some conflict within the team and stuff like that. It needs to be a huge undertaking.

If you want to go ahead, sure, you can give it a try. But I personally think projects like this need their time. Right now, I don't feel you could do it justice, so it is better to set it aside for now and come back to it in the future.

Ultimately, though, it is your decision. Good luck whichever way you choose to go. I don't know if you've read my other story "Strongloch Island" but it got deleted. It had some rushed story issues in there and I think that's probably why it got deleted. Anyways the story is very similar to this in some respects, so I could theoretically rewrite "Strongloch Island" to make it better and to combine this premise with that one. What do you think?

http://pastebin.com/hjVFmmdV

Like I said, the ending in that story is a little rushed and maybe it lacks the dramatic punch it needs. But I could probably do another rewrite, add in the dream portal premise, etc.