Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25994649-20150110234311/@comment-25500640-20150119032929

a few story errors here, I sincerely think that the whole idea is pretty good. a little lacking in believability but then you really have to sell it. The rape scene has to go, even if it is +18 it isn't fitting in the story. All of those events seemed to happen rather quickly and without a revealing light. in all honesty I thought the girlfriend was going to end up being the imaginary friend. kudos for leading my mind into thinking something else, but otherwise it needs some work