Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33937557-20180617200122/@comment-33937557-20180618014713

DrBobSmith wrote: SoDaft Potato wrote:

That does sound, like, really terrible, but I'm not quite sure how I'd feel about making it longer...

(Excuse like. Just there for effect.) One paragraph, maybe 50 words, could show it. You have more than 50 words of fat that you can remove.

Something I have found to be very useful is to paste my story into grammarly.com only one paragraph at a time. When a problem is found in a paragraph then paste in only half the paragraph or one sentence at a time. Sometimes you have to divide up the sentences into parts and very often when you are through doing this you find large sections that you really don't need to tell the story. If you can, find all the unneeded parts and remove them. I'll try that. Draft Two probably needed for this one.