Talk:The Bed of Light/@comment-5952769-20150710081017

I love the premise of this story. It's relatable because it's similar to common fears. I've never heard of this particular fear, which makes it more interesting than a story about a monster under the bed or another common trope. I also enjoy the style of writing you use to describe and summarize this childhood phobia.

The fiery abyss is a real change of pace in the story. Besides the shift from past to present and from anxiety to terror, it seems like your prose style changes. Something about it is just less entrancing. I was still very interested in where the story was leading up until the abrupt ending. Sometimes I enjoy ambiguous endings and unanswered questions, but in this case I found it unsatisfying.

Still, it's an engaging story with an original creepy premise. I'll be on the lookout for more pastas from you. If you feel like revisiting this story, there's definitely potential.