Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25326117-20150827040037/@comment-26475253-20150914225616

This story just struck me as odd, as no proof ever emerged that Chad was a rapist. The black girl "with her hand on her hip" isn't important and changes nothing in the story. I saw several errors (the one that bothered me the most was Spaghetti being randomly capitalized... ) I won't do a full-out review (I never do, really. Just bothers me to comb through the whole bloody thing to find a few mistakes), so this is about all you're gonna get. A suggestion might be to make Chad somewhat of a stalker on this poor girl (you may want to say earlier on that she is, in fact, a girl. Got a little confused.) It'll make a bit better of a story, perhaps delving into any major social or mental disorders Chad may have.