Talk:Making More/@comment-31077845-20170302125731

Oh contrare; I'm the one who fills people with babies around here thank you very much.

Fairly creepy once we reach the climax, although the initial premise is a little...flimsy. If a person wanted to have children of their own that badly that they would go to that length, AND they, as stated, had lots of money there are a lot of ways to accomplish that that start at moral-ish but highly expensive, and as you move down in expense you increase in immorality until you get to "Close to free but highly immoral and illegal", feel free to use your imagination on that one, but if you're at the point where you'll spend everything, clearly don't give a crap about your partner at all and know they're the infertile one why not do what a sensible person would do and do this new thing they came up with called "splitting up" then finding a woman who wants to have kids? There's lots of them, and some who are almost as obsessed as the narrator and would kill to meet a wealthy baby daddy, even assuming the worst about the narrator as far as looks and charisma. It's clear if you're going to turn your partner into a horrifying monster that the problem isn't wishing to continue the relationship or raise your children with that person, so yeah.

The "And now we're coming for you dear reader!" ending is fairly cliche, I would've recommended scrapping that, making this an alternate timeline sort of thing where something, some kind of radiation, something in the water, I don't know, made ALL women infertile, so not only would that remove the above issues but allow it to be a commentary itself on the human obsession with survival that can reach the point of obsessive madness and the willingness to sacrifice everything else to reach that end rather than mostly just being one crazy guy who isn't very good at brainstorming.