Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28353236-20160618150926/@comment-28266772-20160618202253

Capitalization issues: THe only thing it remineded me of was the cruch I was a priest at./when i saw a man walking down the park

Spelling issues: THe only thing it remineded me of was the cruch/This left me confused and left me screching my head/It's imposible I lost it since/bussines/nonsence angry/took out a object./ tommorow

Punctuation issues: It said: "Hope that this helps you with your bussines. See you around. - M. Handers" This was strange./

Wording issues: I couldn't really do that cause I wasn't so tired and just then I've realized that, I've never actually opened the box Handers gave to me./The man gave me a disturbed look and said that, Mr Mark lives here/He reached out to his bag that was given to him since he would be leaving tommorow and took out a object./ infact the face

Formatting issues: On it was drawn a house, almost like a child drew it.

Other issues: Walls of text - you need to break your paragraphs up. You also change tense frequently, and the wording can be very confusing. Also, while people will often try their best to highlight mistakes I found too many to really get them all while reading this. It needs a thorough spellcheck and proof reading. You can get extensions for chrome, use the website spellcheck.net, or just use MS word which will automatically find spelling, capitalization issues, etc. automatically.

You should give the wikia's style guide a read to get a sense of how to format, and denote speech in your stories. It also offers lots of advice on other punctuation standards, etc.

In terms of story this is too vague, and it doesn't really make any sense at all. The overall sequence of events isn't clear, and it never tries to conjure up any atmosphere. Again - read the wikia's style guides for a greater sense of what I mean.



