Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20180204184544/@comment-25170312-20180207022504

Icydice wrote: Ok, so I'm not much of a reviewer but here goes

I didn't have too many gripes with the story. Small things like him throwing up because of a dreamand tiny things like that didn't matter much to me. I'm not 100 percent sure about the end though. You referenced her killing Ben in the dream, and refetencer her getting mad at Ben a lot so I thought it would be her killing him, which would be really predictable. You threw in a little spin instead, but I'm still kind of unsure what happened. I don't really know how to put it.

Other than that I thought it was pretty goid. I don't think those topics have been used that much.

Thanks for reading! It's supposed to be ambiguous as to whether the narrator actually has a doppleganger or if she has a split personality and doesn't realize that she did in fact kill Ben. Mostly, I'm looking for glaring errors in logic or character motivation but I think if you didn't notice anything then I'm satisfied.

I see you posted something earlier so I'll go check it out. :)