Talk:Dani/@comment-5733573-20180804223818

I like the characters and the scares, but the plot here is forced and unrealistic. There's no way two people would just stop trying to get back to civilization even if they did find a cabin in the woods. This part of the plot---and it is a big part---is just completely unbelievable and inhibited my ability to enjoy the rest of the story. There are also some small errors that could use a proofread. In any case, the general idea and the diary approach were very nice and I'd like to see what you come up with next.