Talk:Hyper Cola/@comment-25052433-20140813082823

This was a fun story to read and as far as any writing critiques go, I can think of very little here.

One suggestion I would toss out would be research. Coca-Cola has had an energy drink out since at least 2004, called Full Throttle. Otherwise though, this was a great story with an original plot that was executed very well. The creepiest moments would be the people just standing in the corner, very good use of description.

8.5/10.