Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-40164173-20190718014418/@comment-9041013-20190718103835

Well it's riddled with cliched tropes. I wouldn't believe anyone if they told me that they took in a child that refuses medical attention. That kid was asking to have the cops called on him.

Why was he riddled with bruises given his monster pal? Convenient plot points that serve no actual purpose and kill the internal logic of the story.

Woman brings in random kid and her husband goes, "did you think it was a good idea to bring a kid to an adult board game party?" what... What are these people?!

Womsn sees something clearly paranormal ~ does nothing

Street kid who pretends to be troubled by "street life" is against gambling... What?

Why are these characters so unlifelike?

"we made you into one of us now tell the world our secret because reading about us gives us power over the reader" ~ had it been better, i might've believed that but as it stands its just not believable at all.

Mentioning a CP character unironically in a CP is bad.