Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20181104232254/@comment-36627132-20181105064743

I agree with NoTimeCreepy.

Spelling and Grammar Issues: "I’m the last one left." could be worded better. "skin cracked and shattered like a porcelain doll" perhaps a more worthy analogy? And are you purposely leaving spaces in the middle of words? If so I thought he was writing all this, not saying it (even if he is saying it you should use ellipsis). I'm assuming by tons of misspellings in Wouldn't It Be Nice that you were just typing too quickly to care that you were making mistakes. ("nise"?). From here on this just turns into one cringe-worthy typo after another. The poor spelling not only makes it hard to get through, but also guarantees that this story will be deleted within minutes of posting.

Spelling Issues Continued: Ellipsis is three periods and a space, in this story you have them as just three periods and no space.

Plot Issues: This one was hard to sit through because it is too long, it offers nothing that pulls the reader in, and is mostly just pointless thoughts. There is not much to this story: no build up, nothing exciting that keeps the reader interested, and no explanation.

Honestly, it feels like a Trollpasta, you have a monster in space (which is actually funny, not scary) and a bunch of typos.