Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26705150-20150904010042/@comment-26475253-20150904011634

Decent idea, but it isn't well written, missing words in places or just not very good imagery in others. I believe with a little TLC this could be a great pasta, a dream pasta bringing a new concept to the game. Somewhat reminds me of the old show Eureka. Well done so far, now just to edit it.