Talk:After the Sign-Off/@comment-44645818-20191211203416

The good:

There were moments I loved, like when the speaker imagines the studio closing for the night; the imagery was so specific and evocative.

I also liked the inclusion of unique details, like how the only TV station is run from a barn and even the kind of pizza our speaker is eating the night of the happening. The specificity worked to anchor me in the set-up, which I think may be even more important than the scary stuff when it comes to writing good horror, creepypasta or otherwise.

What needs work:

The description of the killing was a little confusing in how abstract it was. I remember wondering, for example, if the reflected light were a wrist watch or a blade; before the blood, I also thought the captive had their neck broken.

(That said, I love the description of the blood as "something dark and copious".)

The ending seemed rushed, which was disappointing after such a good set up. I wish I had more clues who staged the murder and what their motivation was in putting it on air, since it seems like no one saw it. I'm guessing it could be a conspiracy, like the whole town is watching these murders for fun and covering it up in front of newcomers, but I can't say I'm satisfied with this conclusion without more definitive evidence.

Overall: You're a good writer, which is clear in the beginning of this piece, but the ending needs more attention.