User blog:Cornconic/Can I get a review on my story?

I've had a story up on the Writer's Workshop for a couple of days now, but no-one has left a comment so far. I wouldn't be making this post if not for a writing competition I wanted to enter soon, so I need a review ASAP. Sorry for my impatience. If you want to leave a review, please do so on the story's page and not in the comments here.

The story's name is Eggs and Bacon.