Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30891328-20170121204936/@comment-29196722-20170122023153

I didn't like it.

Why was the text's color black? The light was blinding him but me highlighting the whole story was blinding me more.

Don't overuse "But for some reason" i did that as a kid sure but don't overuse it.

"I heard footsteps coming from upstairs, I ran back up the stairs and turned my back and saw a tall humanoid  creature"

Wait what? You heard footsteps upstairs and when you look back there was a person? Then what was the sound for?

This didn't appeal to me very well