Talk:Murderous Events/@comment-14817566-20131122180353

That's not even... Not to sound rude, but there are many things that make this completely unbelievable.

1. You made a girl chop off her head. She wouldn't be able to write if her head's been chopped off, she wouldn't know where the paper was. Nor would her body be able to hold the pencil, and it wouldn't even know what to do because this is all controlled by the brain. Which is in your head,

2. You keep saying I, but never introduce new names. Is it the same person being reincarinated? Or is it two, or maybe 3 people?

3. At the end, you never said what happened to the original ghost. Was it replaced by the girl? Did the girl even become a ghost or just died and move on?

4. Who's Xena? You said she killed their family but.. never said who it was. Was it his girlfriend or someone else?

I'd give it a 1/10.