Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24360864-20160228040042/@comment-25037895-20160228062747

It's not really effective to mention creepypasta in the story, as it breaks immersion and is a bit cliché. There's not a lot of suspense with what's happening to the phone, and the story doesn't make sense (it's hard to tell what's going on). This sentence is confusing to me: "Also, the original part was altered slightly to say the seconds was a rough estimate." It's also a cliché to mention a "true story that is happening right now".