Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-1186783-20140817151538/@comment-25052433-20140820055506

Yeah, honestly it came across as a tad subtle, either that, I was just completely oblivious to it, could be either.

I like the idea of incorporating numerology into the story though. My main suggestion would be to slow it down a bit, let the story unfold more on its own, rather than trying to turn the second installment into a math lesson. Of course, that all depends on how many installments you intend to right. The more stories you plan on, the slower you can reveal the inner secrets of how the Dawson family actually operates.