Talk:The Girl in the Blue Dress/@comment-24618087-20140320170957

Unfortunately for the others who posted, I'm not giving this a 10/10. Here's why:

When I started to read this, it looked promising enough to enjoy. But as I read on, it began to, in my eyes, kill the story itself. Luckily for the author, there's not much, but it's still a bit of a problem. First off, I felt the story over-used the word "fuck," and eventually ruined the mood of the story. Then, there's the event after the pills were taken. This part ruined the entire feel of story, as it changed from a dream haunting to an erotic fiction. Finally, at the beginning of the story, you said that you were telling us this story since you couldn't sleep, but at the end you said the girl in the blue dress made you write this, while watching you.