Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24957984-20150125024410/@comment-25941663-20150125110724

First off, I am going to say that I don't like theory pastas in general.

Second, I felt like your narrative had no point. I was waiting for a big twist/reveal, but it didn't happen. Your story ends abruptly without giving the reader anything to ponder and question, as most theorypastas try to do. That or I missed it.

Having said that, it was a good read; your narrative flowed smoothly. Also, it plays nicely on the 'what is good and what is bad' theme. But ultimately, it doesn't have a proper plot to make this an enjoyable pasta.