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I've got the rest of the thing up. I made a couple quick edits to reduce the length of my paragraphs on the second half and fight the wall of text syndrome.

You're also right that it may be a bit elaborate to justify having it in a journal format. The main reason I went this route was to easily justify lapses in time. I'm really bad at just saying "two days later this happened" in an original way, especially when I have to do it on average every 4th or 5th paragraph in this case. Any tips for overcoming that if I changed it to a narrative?

The ending is also feels weak right now, but I think that might almost entirely be because of the constraints of having a journal format. I could change perspective at the end, which is something I did with the original draft when I was still going for more a Lovecraftian horror feel. Give it some ambiguity as to whether the events were entirely because of the actions of the protaganist or if there was actually something supernaturalgoing on.

Thanks again for all the help.