Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24976741-20140525150115/@comment-24918243-20140526051243

My issue is not so much about the amount of gore (and there are bucketfulls of it) but in the fact the gore does nothing to advance the story. There are no conclusions whatsoever just details about what mutilations this red robber. Almost like the detective was just some torture-porn fan. That makes the gore irrelevant and added simply for shock.

That's just boring.

Also, the detective in the beginning sounds like he's introducing himself on a speed-date. It doesn't sound official or like a cop.