Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20181130223415/@comment-33904527-20181201145110

DrBobSmith wrote: You have the creepy factor in the trash.

You have the horror of bleeding out in a trash bag and ending buried in the dump.

You lose suspension of disbelief when that garbage truck rolls along. Kyle is depending upon the clicks of Samantha's heels to know when she is there, so he can hear clearly. A garbage truck is a large vehicle with a 400 horse power diesel engine, loud hydraulics and a whole lot of rattle. If you can hear heels, you'd hear that truck a block away. The truck is twelve feet tall and about 25 feet long. Unless this guy is a TOTAL idiot, he'd get out of the bin before he dies in it. You've got to explain that somehow.

A fifth of Popov vodka and a fist full of Oxycontin can often explain why people try to hang out in trash bins. You make a good point about the noise of the garbage truck. I didn't think about that when I wrote the story. I might do another rewrite, so I'll figure how to work around that next time.