Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26525489-20150623192655/@comment-26525489-20160204191525

I added a second part to it. This ones a lot longer and needs quite a bit of revision, I'm sure. If anyone has any ideas on how to shorten the installment without ruining the plot and motivation or maybe to extend or improve the climax or rising action to better justify the length, I'm certainly open to them. Any other comments or criticisms are very welcome as well!