Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-43886227-20190921012948/@comment-35911608-20190927120202

So... it's a spinoff of The Wyoming Incident. Which is already against our wiki's policies. You also bank on people having read/heard the aforementioned story already so that they have an idea of what's going on. But then generalizing it as "it's like the Wyoming Incident but scarier!" doesn't really make it more terrifying. On top of that, there are numerous grammatical and punctuation errors throughout.

I'm not sure what to say to improve it outside of, come up with your own plot. There's plenty of scary television stories and videos already, each with their own unique ideas. Try comparing the Wyoming Incident to LOCAL58's "Contingency" video. DO NOT rip off of either, but pay attention to the differences and the subtle things that make each so scary, despite both being scary broadcasts. I don't find Wyoming Incident that scary to be perfectly honest, but Contingency scares the ever-living shit out of me.