Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4849011-20180321014712/@comment-4849011-20180727142752

I had the descriptions of the procedure because I thought it would be too abrupt a jump if I went from the process starting to the person being completely dominated (and I wanted to show the person becoming less resistant as time passed), but I know that wouldn't be an issue if I'd ended the story before then. I thought one good ending place for the story might be the underwear scene because it would leave the readers wondering what is going on here and let their imaginations run wild.

I thought of having a sequel to this which examines how some parents would rather ship their children (whether teenagers or younger) off to shady institutions which promise miracles instead of working with them, leading to the children being abused or even dying in custody due to the treatment they get. That doesn't mean that this story has a meaning other than, "Dang, this would be creepy if it happened..." It just means that maybe I could use it as the basis for a more meaningful story. If I do write that story, it'll basically be a stand-alone in that it will have Cerdis, but not be an actual sequel since I've decided not to post this story.

"...probably painful in places." No, the fictional procedure isn't painful at all. It wouldn't be any more painful than falling asleep while listening to a music album or a YouTube video on headphones at a medium volume. Things that aren't painful can still mess people up.