Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25226524-20140908005526/@comment-25226524-20140908193443

Thanks mystreve for reading this. I appreciate your feedback, and I will definitely consider your thoughts going forward. The reason I ended it that way was to leave the reader wondering what was going on, but hopefully eager to find out in the later chapters. The next chapter takes a completely different angle, ivolving completely different characters, then I am picking up the first chapter later, while they're trying to figure out what happened. I'll see if there's anything I can do to make the first chapter seem a little more whole, and add some 'edge' if I can. Thanks again for reading and the review.