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WEREWOLF CONTEST SCORE RESULTS:

Wow! That was a wild ride. Simply incredible prose, fast paced, action packed and atmospheric as hell. Fantastic. I’d love to see this story be Pasta of the Month one day.

NARRATIVE HOOK/INCITING INCIDENT: Bamm! Right there in the second sentence: “the call for heroes has been carried to the nearest towns and settlements.” I was hooked right away and wanted to keep reading. Going to have to give this one a 10.

ORIGINALITY: Former crusaders turned werewolf hunters? I’ve seen lots of old-timey werewolf stories taking place over various time periods, but have honestly never heard of that before. Damn, another 10.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: Each of the three crusaders were given a very distinct personality. My only issue is that we were told and not shown their attributes. If they had been left a little vaguer in the beginning, but then had their traits revealed through action and dialogue at the bar it would have been much more effective. Show don’t tell, as they say in every creative writing 101 class. That’s going to cost a couple points and bring it down to an 8.

DIALOGUE: This is the weakest part of the story. There’s barely any dialogue to speak of (ouch, terrible pun there, sorry). As I mentioned earlier, if their personalities were revealed in the bar, through dialogue and interaction it would have been much more effective, and I can’t think of a better place to have dialogue than in a bar scene. They have such distinct personalities, I’d love to hear how they talk, what they say to each other, how they joke and taunt. I’m going to have to go with a 6 here.

EXECUTION: I didn’t notice a single spelling, punctuation or grammar mistake. The action was wonderfully executed, the prose superb. Shit, I’m going to give this a 9, and only not a ten because I think it could have been just a tad longer.

ENDING: Loved it. What a last sentence. Solid 9.

OVERALL CREEPINESS: This was really more of a fantasy action/adventure kind of story than a horror story, but the feeling of dread was palpable and it really had a very spooky feel to it. As if the crusades weren’t creepy enough, there’s a village of werewolves here. 9.

TOTAL SCORE: 61/70