Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5952769-20171126053731/@comment-7673575-20171206221618

Okay, several things.

First, the pacing and the narrator are very confusing.

Second, the ending is confusing as well: if the quilt was sticky for the reason it think it was (and considering that a succubus was involved, it probably is) the stuff shouldn't be there at all: succubi don't waste a single drop. Also, the description was very unorthodox.

At its current state, I'd give this story a 3/10, and not 1/10 only because I've never seen a succubus in a pasta before. Als there are double spacings that annoy me to no end, but aren't technically wrong.