Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25262559-20141201003920/@comment-5632489-20141202231715

I'm sorry but the title is hilariously bad; I actually laughed when I saw it on the forum. I highly recommend changing it.

Also, video game pastas if I recall correctly aren't blacklisted, but they are heavily looked down upon. Especially one like this, sorry to say. The story as a whole was riddled with words that, unless you know you're doing it correctly, should NEVER be used in a horror story:

Blood (if it's overused, which it kind of was here), 666, .exe.

Also, the story lacks dialogue. Sometimes this is salvageable, but here the story is so riddled with cliches and, I don't want to say lack of a plot, but a very vague and seemingly lazy one.

Sorry, but I'll have to oppose this going on the wiki. I highly recommend you add some more dialogue, or at least add spice to the dialogue that exists, and remove any Creepy Cliches mentioned.