Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27018487-20150925195745/@comment-27008899-20151014115045

Great plot. A few things here. If your story begins "I was __ age when this happened." The course of events should start at that age. Next, never say "already ready". To show you were ready for something beyond what percieved or expected capabilities use ",but I was ready. This is kind of like ain't and got. Ok for dialogue but not for narration. Other than that it's very interesting and left me wondering.