Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180607073559/@comment-9041013-20180607204103

Its a PEE TEE ESS DEE story, how lovely.

Quite realistic, I guess, I don't know if pills is what would help one's mind with their dreams. Certainly could reduce depression, psychosis, neurosis and so on, but if one is dwelling on it throughout the day, which most likely occurs in people with PTSD at some point or another, during some or most days, nightmares won't be cured by pills.

You take therapy....

Anywho, as for the story, it worked very well, up to the second dream, which I think is a dream, given the setting and the eventual course of events detailed. It gets kind of hazy there between the character's reality world and his dream world. On the contrary, the first part played itself very very well, it does feel like a genuine routine a soldier goes through during the introduction (I would know, I was one) and it slowly turns into a very good description of a nightmare. Some use of gore, not too much, not too little, just perfect, a lot of use of emotional horror as is fitting for nightmare/in-mind scenes.

I do feel like this is just weird when Noah mentions the Hun with a spiked helmet, but it is in line with what a common soldier in the UK of the middle to late previous century would probably think of Huns and Vikings... It's weird, but it plays well into our cultural biases and stereotypes.

The second part of the story feels like it's a build up to a climax again, a climax that doesnt happen in the story. (I consider the first nightmare to be the climax) which at first glance seems kind of meh, but after giving it some thought, I like what you did here.

Over all, pretty nice.

Work on the technical advice Jdeschene gave you though.