Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20141027053552/@comment-25170312-20141028193049

GreyOwl wrote:

You have every right to feel how you feel, but as I've stated many times above, I have added to this story. I will say that I like to write stories that are descriptive, so I don't understand how me saying her apartment is stuffy is somehow a great offense. Also, perhaps you didn't take into consideration that the prize to the main character is the job. She was struggling to get by, hoping and praying for a better job so that she didn't have to work two. Perhaps you read over those first few paragraphs. And, because Mr. Lancaster is elderly, he is more prone to mistakes with handling the business aka it's time for him to "retire". I tried to make it realistic because even in society now, if you're particularly old (I'm not talking about 40-50) you are deemed more prone to accidents. I didn't want to hold the readers hand through the story, so I made subtle hints that everyone else seemed to have picked up on. But, I do agree with your one point that the characters needed more description, and, before you commented, I had already revised this story and added quite a few paragraphs. As I've said before, you're definitely entitled to your opinion and thanks for reading. Oops, I wrongly assumed you edited the post to add the new stuff in. Kind of a dumb assumption now that I think about it. Sorry about that. I did understand everything though. No offense, but the hints weren't subtle. I kind of feel like you were taking a shot at me with that comment. I didn't mean to be rude if that's how you took it. I had a feeling you would be a little upset since the other people gushed about it so much. I guess I won't bother next time if you're going to take subtle jabs at me. I only reviewed your story, not you.