Talk:To Die/@comment-5733573-20180429094353/@comment-25458443-20180504114541

Haha thanks, I think its that  "casual frankness between very warped characters" that I was trying to get at.. I'm glad that came across, seeing as the other comment here was "P good famio" which doesn't say a lot lol.

I see what you mean with the critiscms, especially about the echo effect having no purpose. What I wanted was to give it a certain child's rhyme vibe although in retrospect I should have handled that much better. I'm not a fan of how 'police' come and shoot at the end, something about that fails under the nursery rhyme lense considering most creepy nursery rhymes are creepy because of implication. Looking back I might have gone a very different direction with this poem if I had the chance.