Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-23872426-20180816040637/@comment-35711173-20180818001417

Typingpenguin wrote: Also, forgot to ask: Was it the ENTIRE ending sequence (The ship flipping, net drowning, all that) or just the whole "Yeah...we're gonna die out here" end?

The whole thing. It was just too many words over too little story. You have to edit this WAY down and provide better reasons for their action. WHY assume there is a spy who wants to get himself blown up by a torpedo?

Sorry, by the end of it I have largely lost my attention.