Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26037362-20150127204147/@comment-26113663-20150201143153

Honestly, is this a spam?

This pasta is purely nonsense. I didn't understand anything, it was just a conversation between a woman and a police officer, both dialogues barely/never made any sense, at all.

At the first read, I already saw the problem. Maybe the punctuation said to the article, "Why do I always feel out of place?" Because it's really "out of place", and sometimes you never put proper punctuation. I'll use the example below:

“This all started about a month ago, when he met her” - ALWAYS put a period after every stament, whether it is a statement or dialogue.

Almost every statement don't have punctuation marks, making your work look childish and uneducated.

The ending made me scratch my head. It ended up like, "What mate? I don't understand." It's like that. The ending has no relevance with the other details; a failed attempt of adding terror to your reader.

You think this can be fixed/edited? Never. Let me get this straight to the point, and I'll be honest, this story is hopeless! There's too much detrimental elements in the story, making it impossible to fix.

You just need to rewrite the entire story, and don't forget to add paragraphs. Don't rely on the dialogue itself. If you ever want to, you're gonna have a bad time.