Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20161002184002/@comment-9041013-20161004171153

ChristianWallis wrote:

I’m gonna be a huge dick and stop here. I usually make an effort to read every story beginning to end but I don’t think the problems are going to suddenly disappear half way through so let’s start with the basics. This story is riddled with mechanical issues. There are spelling errors, word substitutions and tense changes in nearly every sentence. I’d let this go but to make it worse you just go on and on about the most boring things. It takes 600 words to start the actual story. Just start with “I was in Poland and walked past an old man who told me about a murder”. You don’t need 600 words to set that premise up.

Nonetheless I have the intense feeling that English is not your first language. I can’t begin to imagine how difficult it is to write a story in another language and commend you for giving it a really good go that’s better than a lot of natural English speakers’ attempts. What I would recommend is that you look carefully through this wikia’s advice guides and read as many stories as you can over a long period of time. This’ll help sure up your grasp of English grammar and vocabulary.

Thanks for your advice and corrections however its a shame you havent made any points regarding the plot itself, or havent even finished reading the story.

I did mention the pratagonists girlfriends name once I introuduced her, and I doubt less than 300 words out of 2700+ is too much of "useless introductionary info", If I don't give a proper introducrtion in my stories I feel like Im writing lazily.

I'd like you to read the story anyways, just for the sake of reading. :)