Talk:De Sanguine Regis/@comment-31077845-20170307080942

That beginning message was a little...unnecessarily confrontational. If someone's going to edit your spelling they're going to be doing it to the almost entirely english part of it, not the tiny bit that's, well, whatever that is. On that note while I didn't find any spelling errors and only one error in general (the part where it says "right in front of, looking down at me" I'm assuming it's "right in front of me") but my friend, you gots to lay off that comma key. I can often find myself inserting a few too many commas that I'll wind up going back and removing, but in this case it reached a point where the commas looked like rain on the page and I had to actually just ignore them and mentally insert pauses where appropriate, because it sounded like the voice in my head had a stutter otherwise.

The story was ok enough and cohesive and whatnot, although the only thing about it that could be considered creepy would be the level of gore, and that really isn't enough to keep a story afloat. The imagery itself was well executed however.