Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24911945-20140507035855/@comment-24841732-20140507190244

Either ditch or revise the afterword. It ruins it.

The story also need a lot more build up, the ending felt incredibly rushed. And the scenes were the monster says "That's right" need to be... I don't know to word this, shown better.

Later tonight I plan on doing a full review, so you have that to look forward too.