Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20161117152206/@comment-27838637-20161119054123

OK! It has been 24 Hours and I've looked over the story multiple times and can't find any more mechanical errors. So either there aren't any, or I'm just having a shocking couple of days.

I'm a little worried about the comedy. I'm not sure if it is too overbearing or forced, or whether it comes across nicely and blends into the elements of horror well. I'm also unsure about the trajectory of the story - it seems to be a bit wild if you know what I mean. The story was supposed to be ridiculous, but I'm not sure if that ridiculousness is too ridiculous. I took a lot of inspiration from The Cabin in The Woods.

Also, does the twist at the end justify the preceding narrative (as in do all the ridiculous elements make sense, or do they still make the overall narrative poor?)