Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20140602201416/@comment-24304936-20140602202436

Not badly written, but a bit predictable. She was in a coma, comes in the house, then the hospital calls. No offense, but I saw this coming a mile away. Don't know have to give any more constructive criticism, since it's such a short story; obviously any kind of buildup is probably out of the question. This would be better with more added and no indication that ending was going to happen as it did.