Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181017225809/@comment-28428152-20181018040050

DrBobSmith wrote: This has a lot going for it. It needs a good editing and pruning, but by your notes you know that too.

You have an intro that rockets you into the story/

You deliver in the creepy and horror.

The resolution is good.

I like the overall idea.

Your Cat character doesn't feel like a girl. If that's an objective, you need to work on that. It doesn't sound like a girl wrote it. Google "Difference between men and women writers" and you'll see what I mean. There's even a computer program that can tell.

http://www.hackerfactor.com/GenderGuesser.php Now that you mention it, I do see how it still feels like a male perspective. Hopefully when I get to rewriting this, I can more effectively pull it off than I could two years ago. I'll need to flesh out the characters more and better establish their relationships. I'm glad you liked the story, though. It's a bit bizarre, but I think it's just a story that needs delivery to be effective, which I still need to work on