Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24565797-20140618033412/@comment-24565797-20140618194652

well what should i do to improve the story, you can't really help cliches at all because they happen to show up all the time so they'll be labled in almost every pasta. I'm also 5"11 but his victims that he selects he purposely chooses those who are shorter than him.

Now character dev is not something i excell at so if anything as i'm writing this i am still working on the story but i'm not too sure how to go into the whole abusive father story. Tenzikan's mother i still plan on working on before i actually plan on going into deletion appeal.

At least, I can tell you this. i am not finished with this story yet. I only went some more in depth on his clicking which is used to confuse and disorient victims as well as scare the holy hell out of them and his weapons well i have a follow up story for that. he's losing his tools and gaining something a little more....appropriate. I was cleaning up grammar and puncuation but the fact that most people have characters who are like this, it is kind of difficult for me to write a totally fleshed out character. I'm sorry writing isn't exactly my strong suit but i need more pointers than anything.

Not too sure how to have it make sense other than the fact that i need to explain the parents more. Cliches are a little difficult to avoid because the ideas that i have has been used at least once before. But i'm trying to fix grammar and spelling to my best ability.