Talk:I See You, Darling.../@comment-9643206-20150211234627

it was good, but i didnt lie the repeditiveness of the words "darling" and "dear", it fel as if the girl who was playing the game was older than she actually was, as you really only ever hear older people saying stuff like that. I read it quickly and didnt see any spelling or grammar mistakes so i congratulate you on that.

6/10

dont be offended by my critisism, I am only offering advice towards your next story :D