Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20151017205338/@comment-26475800-20151018000719

Okay, well I didn't know the first one was a joke.

The story, there is a section where this is a tense swap in the first part. The second part lost me, I wasn't sure if that was from the journal or if it was spoken word, it think it has to do with the header. But also the second part just starts listing facts and that is where I got lost. It went from story time to college essay time in the blink of an eye. I didn't finish it, but I think that may be where the biggest problem is.

Hopefully that is something useful.