Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181019010044/@comment-9041013-20181019152000

Banned In CP wrote: Tried looking for the perspective change, and not sure where it is, unless you're talking about the exposition, which Daniel could have easily gathered from gossip around the workplace prior to this.

And I get your point about schizophrenia. She doesn't actually have it obviously, but I'll throw in a mention of the doctors not knowing what else to treat her for, and I'll also make her speech a little more frenzied when she starts to get distressed at the end. Though I have known people with schizophrenia from my own time in psych wards, and usually they talk normally unless they're under emotional distress or having an episode (one girl tried to push ke downthe stairs once but couldn't really explain it). But yeah, it does need to be believable that she could he falsely diagnosed, so I'll tweak the speech Well, an unclear neurological damage due to an encounter with the Nameless could do it, or the tweaking of her speech. Whatever you like.

I can't seem to find it either now, I remember it was a paragraph starting with "Daniel... (action word...) ..." Maybe I am losing it too... dunno.