Talk:The Odd Tale of Jim Olivine/@comment-30994599-20190123132611

I feel like the wonderfully Burtonesque setting you've spent so long developing for the majority of the story is somewhat diminished by the predictable ending and cliche format. The theme of the surrreal invading the mundane is conveyed so well up until that point, and I feel Olivine's demise isn't nearly satisfying or shocking enough to do it justice. Personally, I would have liked to see something cruelly mundane lead to his undoing, underlining the flaws in his beliefs and inserting some needed irony to the conclusion.

7.5/10, but still a good story. I look forward to your next work!