Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27014436-20150924112509/@comment-26921530-20150925025001

I enjoy short ambigous stories, but this isn't one of them. The plot doesn't really have much coherence and just sounds like

"On my phone one night and spooky friend comes along and scares the boozi out of me."

That isn't a creepy-pasta that is cliche-pasta. There is absolutely no tension or anything that is remotely intriguing to the audience. There is nothing unique about this. At all. I have read a trillion stories just like this. I mean it could work, but you need to inhance and/or embellish your writing skills.