Talk:It Was Just a Shadow/@comment-44458305-20200115050807

The second-person perspective could have been expanded upon by allowing for a much longer interaction. To balance this out, you might need to add more bone to the start and end, then flesh it out around it. In the second perspective, blurring the narrative lines between the idea of "you" and "them" would be best accentuated upon and hit by the longer interaction. 7/10 for a mediocre start, but enormous potential.