Talk:The Umbreon/@comment-26054278-20150209212602

Is this a good story? Not really, but it isn't bad. It isn't scary because it sympathizes with the main character. It doesn't try to portray them as insane or twisted or anything, but more like sympathetic and ignorant. In this story, it doesn't exactly work when you actually agree with the main character. This is more of a sad story than a creepy story.

However, when a sad story is well written and the plot is good, it can certainly achieve greatness. This story... well, it has some problems.

The writing doesn't always make sense. For example, if this story is what the Umbreon is thinking at each day (or if it is a journal), why are there sound effects? It makes no sense, and it would make a stronger story if the sound effects were removed, so I don't get why they are here. Also, there is a couple grammar errors/sentences that really don't make much sense.

The plot is hindered by the fact that nothing is actually creepy, but as plots go, it could have been much worse.

Therefore, not good, but not bad.