Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20180720101448/@comment-28428152-20180721074636

EtherBot wrote: Either way I'm confused by you saying my comment was semantic and not relevant to the pasta. The entire discussion was framed around this idea about multiverses and how that isn't particularly scary or creepy. As the writer of the pasta, I thought I'd pop in and say that it a) isn't intended to be about multiverses, and b) I personally find that isolation of your brain from your body very unsettling, that's why I wrote the story.

Obviously horror is subjective, so for the moment id appreciate less comments about personal opinion on the spookiness or lack there of. Comments like that are fine on the actual article but now I'm more concerned about grammar or clarity. On that latter topic, obviously not all the intended ideas were gotten across, so I agree in terms of a second draft. Maybe you could make there be more of an emphasis on the protagonist being unsettled by these selves?