Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-43990606-20191104024631/@comment-9041013-20191107232954

Story doesn't make much sense, why would Sofiel decide to run away in fear of the police? He'll get locked if he's caught by the police since he is clearly insane. Given that Schizophrenia is managable, he'll be out in a relatively short period of time. Ed Gein never got treated for his Schizophrenia that's why he remained in the hospital until he died. This guy would've been treated and gotten out.

Also, schizophrenia doesn't look like that. You don't simply hallucinate things, and when you do (if, some don't even hallucinate at all), the more common type of hallucinations are auditory not visual. A bigger hallmark of the disease is distorted train of thought and speech. Sofiel speaks way too coherently to have schizophrenia and his thinking is way to sound. He should be thinking "I shot el chupacabra... see... here it is... bananas... there, there's el chupacabras body". Quite literally be all over the place in his head.

I can't really describe from the top of my head how the distorted speech looks like but he basically should be losing his words, speaking gibberish or making up sentences that make no senfgjhghhfd like you in the morning of a sunday nigfkjhdjt what?!

^ like that, kind of.

Another big hallmark of schizophrenia is delusions, in Sofiel's case, he has a paranoid delusion of being followed around (by a monster) he doesn't act that paranoid however.

So yeah, you should do some research on the subject.