Talk:The Boy Who Became/@comment-25446881-20141023021422

I didn't like the fact that the title was completely unrelated to the story. It was just the name of the story inside the story, and nothing more. The title could have been virtually anything, if that's the only relation it has to the pasta. You should make the title meaninful to the story you are telling, not to the one your character is reading. I feel this is still a work in progress. Maybe you will finish it, maybe you'll let it remain unfinished. Either way, I don't think it's ready for being reviewed.