Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20190527170905/@comment-26475800-20190527184209

This seems very much like how a video game pasta should be done. Not sure if that was what you were going for, but that was the vibe I got from it. It also reminded me of a story that I wrote when I first started here. This is much better than that one, but it has the same subject matter. A bank heist that keeps going on a loop.

I don't really see to much wrong with this story. You did good with this one man.