Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20180102011111/@comment-31708656-20180103040859

Its a great story. I like how its written. From what I can tell, there are no clear grammar mistakes. One suggestion I have is I think a slow reveal of the evil of humanity would give the story more punch. Instaid of going straight to world hunger, natural distasters and such, start at the small local evils. Like theft, vandalism, then escalate the things the AI sees slowly into the serious stuff. However, that would make your story longer and it would make sense if you dont want that.

Anyways, another good story. Keep it up!