Talk:My Friend Addecet/@comment-5733573-20180703213053

It's not bad. It has pros and cons. At first, I was sure this was going to be yet another Pyscho/Rose for Emily, and it almost was, but you got me with the skin mask. I honestly wasn't expecting that, so that was pretty awesome.

Where this story falls short is in the impact it makes, or lack thereof. For something as terrifying as a person wearing someone else's skin, you really need description. Make us see it and experience the sickening terror. As it was, the revelation just seemed way too lowkey. And while you're fixing things, the ending is really anticlimactic. A story this short needs to pack a big punch.

On top of this, there were quite a few grammatical errors and typos, including some sentences where you'd left out a word entirely. Look out for this stuff when you write your next story.

Overall, an enjoyable story with likable characters and a good twist. A little more care with the execution could make it really great.