Talk:Mother's Love/@comment-25052433-20150202170947

In my opinion, this defines what a short pasta should be. Quick and to the point, but loaded with suspense and horror.

You set up the setting and tempo right away, and were consistent throughout. Your choice of 2nd person was a bold gambit, but it paid off in this.

Using the character's mother was the antagonist was unique and original, and your descriptive work on her movements and appearance really hammered in the grotesque image you were going for here.

The best part though was the ending, with the mom's voice coming through the door in a normal, soothing tone. Very unnerving, and was a homerun for setting up the fear factor.

Excellent story, well done!