Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-6822927-20180929234814/@comment-36815674-20180930025625

KingSparta300 wrote: I do intend to expand more upon this, with the main plan being the guy simply views women as whores and has a strange obession with eyeballs.

I would start with how he knows so much about her. Work my way down from there. Give it more emotion. Go more into detail how his feeling and his surroundings.