Talk:Subject C/@comment-29507836-20161011014957

I feel that the beast was not described in a way that made it scary. Your writing just made it seem like the "beast" was another cliche monster in grade-B horror flicks. I also feel that you lack of explanation, and that when you do explain what happens, you arrange your sentences in a way that is hard to understand. For example, this line: "My guess was that one of the soldiers was made to kill another, and the two remaining were made to fight to the death". I had to re-read it again just to have a slight understanding of what you wanted to say.

Your spelling is excusable, since it is a journal and not a book of sorts, but I would prefer reading it with no spellings, especially since it didn't really use much harder-to-spell words. It is also obvious that the "YOU'RE NEXT!" cliche is seen here, which is ok when executed right. Unfortunately, for this case, it wasn't.

I rate this one a 3/10. Short, not scary in any sort, and hard to understand. Next time, I would suggest not trying to overcomplicate things and using more details to really make the reader feel that he is in the story as well. Other than that, I have nothing more to say.