Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10319977-20151014231140/@comment-26326346-20151016191913

I can respect that desire, but I feel that you need to try to write something longer first, because a successful micropasta takes experience to do.

Since we are at an impasse, why not try building up your experience by making different stories and then coming back to these? Maybe you'll have picked up some new tricks and would be more successful.