Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20161129220751/@comment-25941663-20161208191201

"her people on the East end of town to escape" - Did you mean to capitalize 'East', or was it a mistake?

"This is not of nature's making, "she thought. - You placed the space before the second quotation mark, instead of after it.

"inhaled by and unseen giant" - It's 'an' instead of 'and'.

"Crinkling and cracking from drying skin, and hardening hides" - Maybe you should remove the comma.

"find rejection quite devasting" - Did you mean to say 'devastating' instead of 'devasting'?

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Another great tale of yours. I liked the action in this one. I will agree with Jay that the ending felt a bit underdeveloped. Maybe a couple of scenes of the warriors attacking the lost villagers would do the trick.

I don't have much more to say. An excellent story.