Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180714055429/@comment-36160783-20180714071959

Mob family idea is great, I think! The only way the reader gets thrown off from that is that the exterminator is hired to do something that involves a direct family member of the person hiring him, the grandaughter. So it might make a reader think, 'oh wait, is he actually talking about a family?'

Once again, cool story!