Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26475800-20150621033617/@comment-26407997-20150621041305

Well,your story starts off very well.Watching a horror movie and then getting creeped out over everything is very easy to relate to.But your writing stlye sometimes slows down the story.like this line: "Perhaps it was the sheer size of the beast, or it could be the matted fur around it muzzle, that fur seems to have a sheen to it in the soft glow of the moon. Perhaps it was the fangs this thing has, even though it is still a little ways back you can see the size of those teeth, large pointed fangs about the size of your index finger" While you shouldn`t rush through a story,this is a perfect example of slowing down your story.

Also,I don`t understand the ending.You make the name of the street sound very important,so i assume that it is supposed to be some sort of twist ending.But as i have never heard of bray road,I wouldn`t get it.

By the way,If you could read my story "A trial in hell",located on the second page of the workshop,it would mean alot to me