Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24864717-20140516034430/@comment-24821182-20140516044155

I think you did a great job with this story. The grammar is good, the suspense is built quite well throughout the story, and I like the ending.

I don't know how you would make it longer without adding unnecessary paragraphs. Personally, I find the current length of the story just right.

I think this could be posted as an article. Actually, I'm quite sure it could.