Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190515084101/@comment-35711173-20190528065240

This is the fourth draft. I'm hoping I am getting close.

Thank you Locked, Johnathan Nash, Bloody Spaghetti, Helel and Red Nova Tyrant for your feedback. You have helped so much!

The changes between this version and the last aren't as major as earlier drafts, but if you would be so kind as to check it again I would really appreciate it.