Talk:The Abalone Thief/@comment-25764026-20150211174504

I really thought that this story was GREAT!! All the research you did might have been exhausting, but you really pulled it to your character even if it might of been too much (scientists like to go on and on with there research so it worked well). I am sure that any reader could feel some of the emotion from the main character as Suzy died. I only thought two things were wrong.

1) As soon as the sheriff wasn't reacting too to much about the murder of Suzy and the horrible way she died; I instantly thought that he was part of the cult and or the whole town could be in on it too. Make it a little more unpredictable.

2) This story wasn't as creepy as I thought it would be. The cult was mysterious but I didn't find it that creepy or scary.

This story is great just as it is but if you want to make it an excellent story(especially for creepy pasta) it could use just a little more improvement. This is only my opinion though.