Talk:Doli Soul/@comment-17737430-20150314032535

A little too bloody, and the twist is given away long before her face cracks. You get to her face shattereing and this whole story just kind of becomes a pointless bloodbath. Sorry, but  you could do a little better on those grounds. The build-up, however, is nice, and it makes me genuinely feel sorry for Craig, losing a potentially good friend like that.