Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20180223223839/@comment-32764586-20180224051414

HopelessNightOwl wrote: Excellent finale to an excellent series.

Okay, I have one small nitpick and one bigger nitpick.

Small nitpick: the story seems to imply that the Benevolent AI was created in the Doctor's house, so why does it say the AI hadn't seen it before? Didn't he flee from the place in his robot body after the events of the first story?

Bigger nitpick: the "Malevolant" AI took an awful long time to get suspicious of the third AI posing as the doctor. I would think the Malevolant AI would start to ask questions like "wait, after we both just spoke our intentions out loud, why is the Doctor still indenting to destroy my creator instead of realizing that I am the real threat". I would suggest maybe having the Malevolant AI showing clear signs of hesitation just a little bit earlier, though I admit this may cause readers to spot the twist earlier as well.

Hey, thanks for the feedback. I'll be sure to get to your story in the ww tommorow.