Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28963682-20160711021212/@comment-28963682-20160712021039

Thanks for the feedback!

I'll take a look at the guide you sent. I wasn't sure how to write this sentence either: Life is easier with a simple "Yes" or "No" instead of "Maybe" and hesitation.

I use the image of the soundwaves a few times to show how the creatures react to things; the soundwaves seem to get bigger the more noise someone is making.

The protagonist is having another surgery not because she wants to, but because she needs to. In some cases bone fracturesor breaks can best be fixed surgically if there's a big problem. Basically, the protagonist is terrified of another surgey because she doesn't know if she'll have the same experience again.

I did want to leave the story ambigious and sort of open to interpretation. It's not supposed to be clear whether it's a dream or a real place, and I don't really want to suggest either explenation as more correct. The whole sound thing, I guess it could also be taken as, if the protagonist is a take-charge type of person, she's probably very vocal, and being unable to make sound or noise would be frustrating or scary for her.

Also, yeah, I tried to be fairly original with the concept. Hah, I didn't even think of the creature as being a modern art piece that has come to life.

I am probably going to wait a few more days to see if anyone else comments, then I'm going to take all of the feedback that everyone has given me and I'll see what I want to end up changing in the story. Thanks for taking the time to read my story so far!

Also for editing, I just wasn't sure how to format a post while you're in "create a page" or something. However, I think I actually found what I was looking for like hours later lol. Also yeah, I noticed that frmo browsing the wiki that it's best to press "enter" instead of using the "tab" function.

Anyway, thanks for the help!