Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180714055429/@comment-36160783-20180714064824

Yeesh, not sure how it could get much worse than test number 2!

Overall, this was actually surprisingly enjoyable to read, I liked it. The narrator, though, says they have been doing assignments for this same family for 20 years. In this story, the reason for the assasination is because of what happened to his grandaughter, so that seems like a pretty rare case. It's weird that this family is so constantly in need of this hitman to kill people. How often could one family possibly require a hitman (unless by "family" you were hinting it was a mob 'family')? I think it's just a little implausible the exterminator only has one client.

Grammar-wise, there was only one part that could use change (and it's rather insignifcant) which was in the second paragraph it says

"My job gave me the time to coach both my daughter's soccer teams and to attend every school play."

I think it would be helpful to say "coach both OF my daughter's soccer teams and to attend...", since the language could be slightly misconstrued if you read differently.

I'm not sure what category it would work best, though 'Weird' or perhaps 'Dismemberment" (even though no one is actually getting dismembered) seem fitting.