Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26112985-20151113225617/@comment-26425680-20151114090944

I first read this story over on CP.com, and if I recall correctly, many of the commenters (myself included) seemed to feel that the ending was a little too quick. Everything is explained and wrapped up within the space of a handful of paragraphs. I get the feeling you spent waaay more time working on the first half of your story than you did on the last half. Other than a gruesome scene with the eaten uncle, it's lacking any sense of real discovery for the reader. I do like the story, by the way, but if you're looking for ways to improve it, then I suggest you give the reader more to chew on at the end.