Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29433588-20180225182422/@comment-24101790-20180225185039

Sorry but this feels pretty rushed like we're being given the plot points rather than an actual narrative (being told passively really doesn't help the story much either as it makes the fight at the end feel a bit bland).

The plot also comes across more as an attempt to introduce your OC character rather than tell an engaging story. It hits a lot of the same beats as a majority of other OC stories (Bullied character, unfaithful lover, snaps, murders, continues murder spree).

Additionally there are a number wording (both awkward and spelling errors) here that I would post, but the doc format doesn't allow me to copy/paste. All in all, I would say to hold off on posting as this story needs quite a lot of work and revision.