Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28088262-20140626213841/@comment-28088262-20140701214311

Thanks! That was more helpful than the other critic's (-_-") at least!

Does 'a man walked by, how exciting.' convey the point clearly enough? It's more a change of heart and mind than just a change of physical appearance. (Even though I've already suggested a billion times of what's going to happen in the text, haha.)