Talk:The Long List/@comment-24040907-20150225230507

This was a good one. Overall, it’s tragic and depressing, and puts a heavy black cloud on the shoulders of the reader from start to finish. You did a fine job creating this atmosphere and then operating under it. The actual story is heartbreakingly beautiful in the way that it’s written. As others have noted, your use of similes is superb.



As the detective descends into madness, he connects the death of the child to everyone from the police chief to his wife. The ghost of the child (or perhaps the detective’s own insanity) is turning him into quite the killer. Everything falls into place at the end, and it’s up to the reader to decide what really caused him to go on this killing spree.



I think that you did an excellent job of crafting a story that really moves the reader, and inspires grim emotions in them that only come from Noir gems like this. This story provides a glimpse at a Gotham City-esque situation, if you will. Everywhere there is evil, everyone is corrupt, and there is no easy way out for our haunted hero.





