Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20170111014614/@comment-26399604-20170117032045

This was a nice little creepy encounter. God knows I would've been more clumsy and wouldn't have made it out alive to tell the tale.

I think what I liked the most about the creature was how it was studying his rooftop and trying to open the windows. I got the vibe of an animal like a bear or raccoon when coming across a human construct; it most likely has the ability burst through but it doesn't know any better. I thought that was well done.

"Damn modesty!" Has to be my favorite line and part; so true for the moment lol XD.

I did note some areas that should be addressed. Please see the "[]" for corrections/recommendations:

+ Winter time [always] dries out my sinuses and the steam from the ninety-nine-degree water is refreshing as I inhale [moisture] from the air.

+ ...feeling around [the] surface before moving the other limb.

+ It drops its shoulder in disappointment and slowly makes its way to the edge of the house, leaps high into the [air] and lands on a nearby tree and disappears into the night.

+ One foot over the edge and then the other [,] the water drips from my body as I exit the [*tub].  '*'water' is redundant. I suggest the word 'tub'.' 

+ I am paralyzed with gut-retching fear from the realization [that] the glass was sitting on the edge of the towel.

+ Not a second later, a crash of something slamming into the wooden [door] booms across the dark house.

+ I lay with my back against the door in case it tries to force its way through [*it], but no more sounds come from the other side[**].

 '*Door was redundant. I suggest the word 'it'. ' 

 '**Door was redundant. I suggest cutting out that last part, stopping at the word 'side'.' 

+ I turn and slowly lift my head to peer out through the window, and [*] with the thing, only a thin pane of glass separating us.

 '*Awkward wording. I suggest: '   - our eyes meet, only a thin pane... 

  OR 

 - my eyes met with the thing's, only a thin pane...