Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26227173-20150320210217

So, recently I attempted to upload this, and it was deleted, now before I make an appeal, and embarrass myself by having it denied, I had the idea that I would upload it here, so that you all can give suggestions and show me any errors in the writing. Thank you in advance!



            It was New Year's, I couldn't hear myself think, due to the explosions in the distance of the fireworks. To be honest, I was kind of fed up with all of the celebration, after all, my dog had passed away the week prior, and I wasn't over her death yet. So there I was, sitting at my computer, slowly drawing something, at this point, I don't even know what that drawing was, because a few seconds later, I heard something move behind me. At first, I thought it was one of my other two dogs, but, where they would usually lay or sit down, nothing was there. I had thought, maybe it was just the house adjusting, after all, I live in Alaska, and the temperature outside was bitter cold. I slowly went back to what I was doing, and had decided to stop whatever I had been drawing, and start working on a writing assignment due sometime in January it doesn't matter in this story. I began to write more of the assignment, after all, it was a free write, as long as it met the requirements. I continue to just type away on the assignment, that was until that noise came again, this time, it was different, but seemingly closer than before. I quickly turned my head, and looked around my room. I was looking around, paranoid, and in fear. After all, I hadn't slept in a few days, due to night terrors, and at this point, I assumed it was just a few hallucinations, due to the major lack of sleep. At this point, I continued to write, seeing the occasional shadow that shouldn't be there. It seemed like my own answer to the noises was easy, just the lack of sleep. But more and more noises kept coming from around my room, as if someone was walking around it. I still believed it was just the house, although my belief in this began to slowly disappear.

          That was, until felt someone watching me, you know, that feeling where someone's eyes are staring at you, or what you're doing? I had that feeling, more and more. I couldn't look behind me, I didn't DARE look behind me. I was too afraid, I wasn't ready to stare into the eyes of whatever was directly behind me, just staring. Later I turned off my computer, and attempted to go to sleep, but, I couldn't. Not in my bedroom. I grabbed my pillow and a light, but warm blanket, and went to my living room's biggest couch, and laid the pillow on it, but as I went to lay down on it, and pull the blanket on me, I saw someone, wearing a heavy coat, and a ski mask, make a dash out of my room, and jolted and the stairs, and before I could react, I heard the front door rip open, I just stood there, I processed what had happened, and out of complete and utter terror, ran down to the entry way. The door was open, and snow was slowly drifting in. I watched as in the distance, more fireworks exploded, and I shut the door. This isn't supposed to be some sort of story where at the end a twist happens, and then you can't sleep at night, or there is some stupid picture that is at the end, that makes you double check your closet at night. No. This story is just what happened, and I just want to tell you. If you are alone, at home, it is the middle of the night, and you feel eyes watching you, don't just assume that its the house, and if you're seeing shadows, alert someone, call one of your friends, or the police, and get out of there. I didn't know how close that person was. But, this morning, the first time I have come back into my room, I remembered sites where stories like this are shared. Not all of them are real, that's for sure. This story is up to you, whether is happened, or if it didn't. I hope that you never have to be in this situation. I hope that I never have to deal with something like this again, that's for sure.  