Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150430062138/@comment-26326346-20150509204454

I tried to make the ending ambiguous to where Grenwalt's death could have been due to the snake or that Agent Stockman could have slipped something into the water he fetched him.

In the revision I was originally going to have Stockman slip a pill in the water that was supposed to cause Grenwalt to have memory loss, but it ended up killing him and the story was going to end with Stockman cussing out someone at the FBI over the phone for lying to him about what the pill did.

I feel like the story is more interesting and has more character now. At least we don't know of Grenwalt's fate from the beginning of the story like we did before.