Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180915161121/@comment-9041013-20180916093636

Honestly, it just feels like a typical doppleganger CP. It's somewhat unoriginal and well isn't very creepy in any way, for me that is, because I've read a bunch of them with a similar premise. A random doppleganger shows up and ruins the pratagonists life because reasons.

Maybe you should add something that make it stand out, like, I don't know, add something... give a reason to the doppleganger existing. The Doppleganger showing up out of the blue just seems random and make me feel like you didn't put enough thought into it.

It just feels like it's been done before.

Also, how about making the pratagonist actually lose his life on his own, like he keeps getting and trouble due to the weird occurances with the doppleganger due to his stress making him develop a temper and the like. Basically, he gets in trouble with the police, then loses his job over an explosive episode after hearing of the "doppleganger" and so on and so forth, until he loses everything.

Also, I'd have him meet the doppleganger at the closing statement after he loses it all and I think he should meet the dopplegannger at a casual place, like a supermarket or something. Catch us all off guard.

It's all up to you eventually.