Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-23872426-20180816040637/@comment-35711173-20180816071957

Typingpenguin wrote: Just to clarify I want to know a few things:

A. Did you enjoy the story?

B. Does the multiple character perspective narration work well?

C. Would this be qualified for posting on the website?

Anything else you'd like to add or comment would be appreciated! Thank you so much! a) It started out good but bogged down.

b) It doesn't work badly for me but I would probably eliminate it to tighten the story up.

c) I would work on it some more.  It's not bad but it can be better.  It's too long for the amount of meat in it.