Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27589686-20160111051801/@comment-24101790-20160111053434

"Wrongfully deleted" isn't the word I'd use as the story is well below our quality standards. If you proof-read this more, maybe you wouldn't be having this problem. The story is riddled with punctuation (leaving apostrophes out of contractions, not using commas/semicolons correctly), capitalization, awkward wording, spelling, tense swapping, and story issues.

You don't properly capitalize proper nouns. "I live in France, although I am not actualy french (French).", "Maybe so i could play tetris", etc. You forget to capitalize "I" multiple times. "My whole entire life i have been interested in dark", "like i usually", "when i'm bored.", "i had never heard of the catacombs," etc.

Awkward wording: "i was watching abandoned places videos", "A huge feeling of panic came across me like a bullet", "Maybe so i could play tetris while dying of hunger and thirst, who knows.", etc. Redundancy issues: "There is graffiti everywhere. The walls were just absoluty covered in graffiti." and "The sound was dreadful, and terrifying." Both state the same things so it feels like you're trying to pad the word count.

Wording/spelling: " I discoverd it", " I had completley forgot", "iI didnt know what to do.", "while calmming myself down", " I stopped breathing completley to listen for the sound", "I could here a sound.", etc.

You shift tenses multiple times. "There is graffiti everywhere.", "I crawl in the dirt for around 5 minutes, and then i can finally stand up.", etc. You are telling the story in past tense so you need to stick with it.

Story issues: this really feels like you just ripped off the Paris Catacombs event. You don't really add anything to it (and in fact paraphrase it in the very beginning and then repeat the story) On top of that, the story feels rushed, is lacking in description, and multiple issues. Gotta say, I read this at a glance and turned up these issues. Please spend time on your story next time and use the writer's workshop before submitting to the main site.