Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32118772-20170605044551/@comment-26425680-20170606222436

I like this as an intro to a longer story. Essentially, you've given us an interesting character without giving him anything to do. I mean, he has a "job," but we see only the smallest glimpse into what it entails and how he feels about it. There's really no character arc or plot development. Your writing style is good enough to pass standards, so I suggest focussing on a longer, more meaningful interaction between your main character and one of his souls.