Talk:Gliomas and Graves/@comment-26326346-20160531212947

Too short and interesting.

In all seriousness, I did find it a bit short. It felt as though it ended right when it was getting started, but it may have just been because I was wanting more. You had me laughing when it mentioned that he was walking out there with a trowel among the other things, at that point I knew what was being implied XD I like how you started the story off as sad, but sweet and then had it turn sickly as the reader learned more about things.

I can't really settle on an ending. I kind of want ending one because he gets his due, but on the other hand the punishment is completely out of the blue (rhyming not intentional). If someone had followed him out there, then had it been just that time? If they had followed him out there before, then why didn't they act or inform the authorities then?

But... the ending seems a bit genius if you intended for it to be her vengeful spirit that was burying him and now that I'm typing this out, I kind of feel like that was what you were going for. In ending 2, her disgust might not have been born of him being buried with her, but rather him burying himself with her and enjoying it thus robbing her of revenge.

Great work as always, Empyre.