Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20190209043821/@comment-9041013-20190312235910

I have to agree with Empy here, how did the view traumatize the narrator? You keep mentioning how he is traumitized to the point needing this cathartic closure through a second viewership but you never explain how exactly he is traumitze. Give us details, was it nightmares, night terrors, dark thoughts, some sort of flash backs... Give me something, Owl.

Also, I didn't like the feeling of New World Order this Lost Media Group gives off, might as well make them seem more criminal. People consume Snuff, gore, illegal pornography and what not. Give them a mafia feel, and bang, you have something that feels far more real than "we give people the option".

Also, isn't writing this whole thing (in story) kind of "revealing the secret", as your narrator is sharing this somewhere in story, thus I think the closing statement should be altered.