Talk:Penpal/@comment-25944304-20141230233358

Excellent story!! Amazingy executed, excellent grammar, minimal typos, etc. It does tend to go all over the place, but that is a problem that would be hard to fix considering the medium you used (short stories). What I mean is that it's hard to remember certain details, such as how old you and Josh were when you went to search for Boxes. I was a little surprised that you guys were cursing when you were under thirteen, but that was just me :). Some details are just harder to remember and get lost when another story comes around and you suddenly have to remember it again, but other than that, it was an amazing read! Loved the suspense, creepiness, sadness over the loss of all the characters, and the mental instability of Josh's parents was greatly executed! You captured everything-- emotions, events, hindsight-- perfectly!