Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44987001-20200205002909/@comment-44482918-20200205011208

NedWolfkin wrote: Carzyshark28 wrote: So how can I make it better Honestly, it is pretty much doomed from the start by being a blacklisted subject. We're at a point where anymore video game pastas aren't scary at all. Of course horror is subjective, but certain things have just completely lost their shock after a while.

On top of that, this is riddled with cliches which have been outright banned (hyper realism, for example).

I suggest you take more time on your stories. This one lacks proper capitalization (i.e. "x box", "fortnite"), punctuation, and quotation marks.

Take more time on your stories. You can't just zoom through writing one and expect everything to turn out perfectly. I have thought of a way video game creepypasta can be scary what if the game is a shifting our attention to it while we ignore big real world problems but one day someone steps away from the screen and discoverers the horror of the real world