Talk:The Shredder Monkey/@comment-28423057-20160510004235

Good work, quite interesting. Parallel dimensions are one of my favorite topics, and believe it or not it's kind of difficult to find authors who don't either get it completely wrong, or trip over themselves trying to get it right.

My only real complaint is the ending. I think the whole, 'Ariana lost and now she doesn't exist' part didn't really fit. I'd have done something more ambiguous to keep possibilities open, just a tiny little glimmer of hope, or material for future work.

I'm biased though, as I dislike downer endings as a general rule, mainly because so many are done so badly. This one was fairly well done though.

I look forward to reading more of your work.