Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-1284417-20150728030509/@comment-26475253-20150728031658

Um. Hmm. How should I put this. Commas aren't candy. More does not make everything better. Also, you tell this from a first person view even though it's quite clearly only the two... All spelling was butchered blatantly, without regard to the English language. Random words appear to be capitalized throughout the story, and the SABER just over-does it. I'd also like to know why one brought an AK-47 on a fishing trip. Um. Hmm. I would like you to paste this onto Microsoft Word and fix everything, try to develop the story beyond people screaming and fishing, and/or try again with a brand new story. I dub this condemned. Overall, a 0.5/10, I cannot see this getting posted on the actual site AND STAYING THERE. Try again, friend.