Talk:Under a Rotting Sky/@comment-24101790-20150629013146

Once again, Humboldt shows his literary chops and delivers a story steeped in punk tradition/culture. You can tell he’s a fan just by the way he re-creates a lot of the scene. Unfortunately punk was really imploding and shifting at around the time I was growing up so most of my experience with the genre is relegated to documentaries and second-hand stories. Even with that against me, it’s easy to tell you put a lot of work into re-creating the environment.

As always, the grammar is impeccable. You could even say it’s alright (Just to get your goat, Humboldt) so there’s little to nit-pick here.

My only grievance is that it feels like the song you were assigned (Under a Rotting Sky) was used in a more auxiliary manner than the other entries by relegating it to the introduction and conclusion, while giving a greater focus on bands like Black Flag and The Misfits for the main portion of the story/environment building. You did manage to bring it around full circle in the end with some lines from the song itself which I’m glad about.

That set aside, it was a very focused story that did a great job of telling the nature of betrayal, regret, and yes, even love. Kudos.