Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5619531-20140831202209/@comment-5619531-20140904213200

Jett Cyber wrote: It could use a plot twist at the end. I did intend to make the narrator the man who lost the people he loved. I also wanted to make the ending a little bit better with the narrator idea by saying that the darkness of the room ate his being and his helps. But I didn't because I thought that it was cliche (what with the unfair narrator). But I'll think of something.