User blog:Ace n Annie/My oc Ace and her story

I just want another opinion from you guys how you think my oc Ace, and how her story is going thus far.

So I know what to change and how to make her story better.

You can find her story on youtube here.

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCf8X7-g8KykNNmeJXK3ruCQ?view_as=subscriber

Warning: Her story is still in development

I just want your opinion on what to change and what to keep in her story thus far.