Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29454058-20160805085241/@comment-27614308-20160805090401

Start a new paragraph whenever there is a new speaker. Break up the walls of text. Also, get rid of the rich text. (Copy your story, go to Source Mode, and paste it.)

Once you've done that, it'll make it a hell of a lot easier to critique since it doesn't cause so much of a headache to read.