Talk:Hanging Man Hill/@comment-5000412-20140321122215

For a first, it's great. I will say that upfront. It's written very well, so I can't say much negative about the quality.

What I don't care for is the progression of the story. The beginning had me well immersed in the environment, and set the stage very well for a potentially detailed and creepy experience. However, everything near the end just seemed to happen all at once. Not only was I confused, but I was left unsatisfied with how the last of the story didn't give me the same feel as the beginning. I reread some of the last paragraphs because I thought I had missed something, but even now I don't find it to be highly appealing.

I'd say that's my only major complaint (or at least what I can think of at the moment). Like I said, it's quality writing, and I can understand why others may have liked it more. If this is only your first, you're on the right track for sure, and I encourage you to continue writing.

-E