Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25558572-20140709014159/@comment-25558572-20140709024035

Dawn mayer wrote:

Your story is interesting, and it kept me reading until the end. The only thing, though, is that it may be a bit predictable. I knew beforehand that the centipede would leave an egg even before it was removed. Predictable? That makes me a bit nervous. Is there anything I can do earlier to make that ending less predictable?