Talk:Victim/@comment-26480939-20151201003600

Okay, this was a pretty interesting pasta. I was kind of confused with the plot, though. A brief summary of the plot (as I understand it):

The 'VICTIM' of the title was the soul/spirit/consciousness of some boy who had previously owned the SSB64 cartridge and died somehow, but was tormented in the game long after his death, which may or may not have been caused by MH. The narrator finds this game and upon triggering the appearance of 'VICTIM', was told to stop playing (presumably due to the fact that he/she would be the next 'VICTIM' if they lost). They perservere and fight MH, eventually defeating him, which freed 'VICTIM' from the cartridge, putting his soul/spirit/consciousness at rest once and for all.

Did I get all of that right, author? Or did I miss the point entirely?

Either way, this kind of reminds me a bit of BEN DROWNED/Haunted Majora's Mask with the narrator helping a 'trapped in a video game' entity of ambiguous morality. Which is perfectly fine with me, as I like that whole 'sealed entity in a cartridge' trope.

Constructive crit time: Maybe you could give the readers a bit more information on 'VICTIM', such as how he died or how his spirit/soul/consciousness got trapped in the Smash 64 cartridge to begin with. Because there's a fair number of questions that got raised but never addressed in the pasta to begin with.

Overall rating: 9.5/10 Very well done, but needs some backstory expansion.