Talk:The Cell Phone Game/@comment-9600371-20140104203908

I see.... the twist was that Rottenbacher's protective item was the Nazi armband. It would protect him, but in return, he had to persuade everyone who saw it that he was a Hitler fanatic. It tortured him emotionally, not physically. He was truly a devoted Christian, and because he had to keep this ongoing image of him being a jerk, he wore the cilice as he felt it was a sin. Also, the twist where Stephanie is the main antagonist was good too. I can tell it was hard for him to try and save her, but at the same time, he knew she was an malevolent person. This story is fantastic, and I did not skip one part. The suspense and adrenaline coursed throughout this story. I would have preferred if there was a picture. Maybe of Rottenbacher's armband. If there is a sequel, I will definitely read it. This was a perfect pasta, maybe better than Ted the Caver. Overall, here's the score

Characters: 10/10

Story: 10/10

Creepiness: 10/10

Pictures/Videos: 8/10

Grammar: 10/10

Overall: 48/50

Grand Story. This is the kind of pasta we Creepypasta authors use as inspiration.