Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-37638539-20181127034310/@comment-36627132-20181127043333

Even though this isn't Writer's Workshop, I'm still going to review this because it has a lot wrong with it and I think you can learn from these mistakes.

Spelling and Grammar Issues: The story is in one giant wall of text and should be broken into paragraphs. "gashed her and sewed back the gashed parts. " that's redundant. "and i ran out" "I" needs to be capitalized. "Oh god, help me!" God should be capitalized. " I got my truck to stop" should be "I stopped my truck".

Plot Issues: First of all, there is little plot to it which makes it feel like the sole purpose of this article is to introduce your Creepypasta OC. "Call me Catty. Pronounced like Cat." then why didn't she just say "Call me Cat", was the point to tell the reader it isn't pronounced like Katie? Why isn't she in an orphanage? The main character is an idiot: they talk down to Catty (which in my opinion makes them deserve to be attacked) then later leave the safety of their truck. Why didn't anyone call the police? Surely someone had to see this, after all someone did find the main character unconscious. The attack itself was unrealistic. And finally you end the story with the I-awoke-in-the-hospital cliche which you top with another cliche: the doctor not believing the main character.

There are more problems with this story than I listed. However, since this is not Writer's Workshop, I only left the biggest issues with the story.

In my opinion you should use Writer's Showcase for something worth being proud of, not for something that is, in all honesty, something of minimal standard.

For your next story I suggest you use Writer's Workshop.