Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26157212-20150301051859/@comment-24101790-20150301052110

Spacing issues: your story is one large paragraph and needs to be broken up. A typical paragraph is five to nine sentences. "Gray Birch tree.The ground"

Wording issues: shifting from past tense to present. "There was a weary old man who sits (sat) in his little shack near the mountainside.", "He's a lonely old man but for some reason he enjoys (enjoyed) the loneliness of his quiet shack.", "...was missing so the old man grab(grabbed) the little black bottle of paint but lost control of his hand and black paint ended up covering the little china cat(')s eyes.". Words missing: "and if you were to walk on it (, it) would feel as if the ground itself wasn’t even there.", "The man had a(an) assortment", "There was (were) two green...",

Punctuation issues: apostrophes missing from words indicating possession. "cat(')s leafs (leaves)", "cat(')s whiskers", "old man(')s bones"

Story issues: "left leaf to be proportionate to the left (right) leaf." You also mention he gathers materials for the cat from the pound, but you state earlier he lives in a shack in the middle of nowhere. The ending also needs work. "existence .(space not needed) Unknown to anyone but a little china cat." There needs to be more build-up and connection between the china cat and the man's degradation. All in all, the story feels rushed, the spacing, punctuation, wording, and story issues brought this story down below that of our quality standards.