Talk:Jenna/@comment-25569708-20170218093633

So after reading this I really have to agree with the past reviewers. The way you intertwined the family's backstory with the ongoing action of Jenna shooting up was expertly done. The flow was deliberate and smooth, and (as mentioned below by Dupin) contrasted interestingly with the story's very dark and chaotic subject matter. The thoughts Jenna was having seemed to be genuine; very much like concerns a struggling addict would have, and you let the reader in on the thought process in an effective way. Very well described throughout as well. I would posit that this is less of a creepypasta per se, and more like a type of feelspasta. Very realistic story, and obviously very sad. Around here in New York heroin ODs happen all the time, and I think this story becomes a success by tapping into that real-world horror.

The only part I had issue with was where you wrote "He ran her in the cramped stall", as I didn't quite get what you meant by that.

But besides that, you've got a great, worthwhile short story here. Nice job.