Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26488452-20150612025810

Hello everybody, I'm Sam Foster. I'm new here and I would like to present an idea for a future creepypasta, but I would like to hear some feedback before I start writing the tale.

Shattered

Based on personal events, this deals with a guy dealing with the destruction of a friendship between himself and a girl, but doesn't know if he said or did something that could've caused this madness. He gets into trouble with the police for being accused of harassment and eventually becomes shunned by everyone around him for the conflict. This drags the protagonist into series of depression and rage even to a point where he wants to kill the girl, but tries to get everything back together and have himself forgiven no matter what it takes, even letting the girl putting a bullet through his head.

As stated before, this idea was based on real personal events that occurred earlier this year during my junior year in high school. I even had plans to make this into a novel, but I want some feedback on what's fine and what needs to be improved to make it better. I hope to hear from you all and your opinions and advice.

With hope and terror coming for you,

Samuel B. Foster (talk) 02:58, June 12, 2015 (UTC)Samuel B. Foster 