User blog comment:Oblivionheart/A little help to a beginner/@comment-25226524-20140903172848

Welcome to the site. Empy pretty much summed it up for you, and I would like to put an emphasis on his advice to post in the writer's workshop. This is really important for new writers, and it will likely help you avoid the discouragement that a quick story deletion my cause. I'll use your blog post as an example of things to avoid.

"Im" needs an apostrophe (I'm).

Always use a comma next to the last word before a conjunction in a compound sentence.

Always capitalize the pronoun I.

Always capitalize the first word of a sentence.

Always put a space after you use an ellipsis.

I realize you probably weren't too concerned with these little technical issues since this is just a blog post, but I thought I'd go ahead and throw it out there. Always feel free to ask for advice or a review. Good luck.