Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20190201203454/@comment-36393004-20190204223714

Kolpik wrote: A couple things I noticed: Middle of the paragraph directly below the first screen shot. [An obviously ploy to draw in a moron, right?] An obvious ploy to draw in a moron, right? -or- Obviously a ploy to draw in a moron, right?

Middle of paragraph, below the "You like?" image. [I was almost jealous of her body, not that I hate mine but I I wished I had her ass.] Quick fix here.

I'm not too experienced with stories like this, but it seems to flow alright to me. I'm under the impression that some people are looking for stories like this cuz' they like this style, but there are also those who can't resist crapping on stories like this. The comment section may end up getting quite colorful when you post it. :)(: Write whatcha gonna write, right?

Take this suggestion with a grain of salt, but maybe it could work. --- What if Joe was not too computer\internet savvy? It could explain his mistakes in a way readers might excuse more easily. EX: Joe could be a middle-aged divorced guy looking for a connection with someone on the internet, a realm he knows little about (common pitfalls and such).

Well, whatever you decide to do, good luck. :) Would this be #40 or did I miss that landmark? Thanks for the input, gonna have to make quite a few revisions and I haven't had the motivation yet. I appreciate you taking the time to read it though. (And yes, when completed this will make 40.)