Talk:Camera Nine/@comment-29507836-20161112085052

Quite nice, to be honest. I love the wording, the flow of sentences was astounding, and the pasta itself was humorous (in a good way, just so you know). I also did not notice any mistakes on the grammatical side.

However, I dislike the way the main person acted. It felt as if he was a puppet; his actions didn't seem reasonable to me. It was as if you just made his emotions pop up out of nowhere to begin with.

I like the plot, but it is predictable by the time I reached the part where he was about to open the fourth doors. You already shocked me when you made him bump into a mannequin, but no tricks last twice.

Overall, I loved it, and I rate it a 7/10.