Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180624062817/@comment-9041013-20180628095609

"I have spent decades trying to forget that day. I would curl up at night with a fifth of vodka and AC-DC playing full blast on my headphones to wipe that day out of my head. I tried psychiatrists and pills. Nothing has ever stopped the pain." - Liar liar pants on fire.

You still did nothing to improve the atmosphere in the story. Virtually nothing. On top of doing that, you actually pretend to add emotion into this story by writing things like, "Some people try to recapture the golden moments of their childhood. I have spent decades trying to forget" and "I have spent decades trying to forget that day. I would curl up at night with a fifth of vodka and AC-DC playing full blast on my headphones to wipe that day out of my head. I tried psychiatrists and pills. Nothing has ever stopped the pain."

Where is this pain? It's none existant.

I am getting told something about pain and misery by someone who's reading this something from a paper.

"I am in pain... I don't like to think about this, believe me... please?" - That's the message I got from the whole story.

If you want emotion to be natural you have to tap into your own emotions, or do a method acting bit in your head. Put yourself in your lead's shoes and just think about what it would be like to be him. Aslo, if you want to feel things in general, you have to stop being afraid of whatever might be out there on your emotional spectrum. If it hurts, let yourself feel pain and even cry. Its okay, crying is manly too... Now, seriously, just don't fret your feelings. It's like with everything else in life. You take this hard first step and the rest gets easier.

That's all I've got for you, for now.