Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24859608-20140505145720/@comment-24859608-20140506172054

I appreciate your help, especially with grammar. However, they're are a few things you should know before judging.

''"This set up is really sloppy. So they’re car salespeople and they’re gone all the time. So they’re going to take a mini-vacation to check out haunted sites without their children? Whom they don’t see very often? And they only offer to take one kid? Like, the other kids would be mad jelly, my dude." ''

Just so you know, that part is real. My parents are actually car sales men. And with the kids one is in Military School, the other at a Training Facility. The third one was just a baby, and at my Grandparents because they were watching over him for a month. The other two didn't want to go, as they were afraid of ghosts.

''I’ll give you some kudos for the frozen mirror image, that’s not something I’ve heard before. That’s interesting. So I think it’s safe to assume that this kid is pretty young, most likely 10 or 11, I’m assuming. You expect me to believe that he just instinctively recognizes that it’s the Lord’s Prayer backwards? ''

I am friends with lots of Satanists, and it's the main part in summoning the devil. I have done it before, of course, being a christian, it didn't work for me. Also, I was 12 when my parents stayed at the hotel.

''And now he’s an insomniac? Come the fuck on, man. Try to be a bit less cliché, please. Also, stop borrowing scenes from the movie 1408, man. ''

I am an Insomniac, have been since I was 9. I take medication for it. Also, what the hell is 1408.

''Yeah, carbon monoxide wouldn’t be making you hallucinate. ''

Actually, scientists have proven this to be true...Read Here

Other than those things, and the few orb complaints, this was a pretty solid review. Appreciate it.