Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-17118109-20141223041417/@comment-9584883-20141225140823

This was really good. I agree with Empryreallnvective, this could be more of an introduction to a novel or a novella at the least. If I were you, I'd really consider developing this into something larger. It has so much potential, I don't think you see it yet. A story like this could be developed into a series of books or stories. Good luck!