Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26023389-20150119201616/@comment-25226524-20150122192114

There's a lot of things that need to be fixed with this before anyone can really even read it. Just at a glance I see missing puncutation, misspelled words, lack of spacing after puntuation, awkward phrasing, and most noticibly, no paragraph breaks. You need to take some time to go over this and fix as many of these issues as you can before anyone is going to take the time to read it. This is an important part of the process, and until you get the basics down, it doesn't matter if it's a good story or not because no one will bother with reading it with all of those issues. I would advise reading some other approved stories, perhaps under Suggested Reading, and also looking at some of the writing advice under the Community tab at the top of the page. Good luck.