Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20150110180031/@comment-24510644-20150110212214

A lot about this story confuses me. The 'monster' is under a bed with an unaccesible underside, as far as I can tell, and it seems as if the matress has split somehow so he could reach his hand into the bed & ultimately next to the child. I'm almost positive this wasn't what you were going for, so I suggest wording it much differently in order to give your reader the correct visual. Along with that, I also think you should intertwine more elements that could creep out your reader, because it was definitely lacking.