Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20150912042159/@comment-25170312-20150914233336

Thank you, Humby! I really appreciate the in depth critique. I guess I have a lot to consider between the three of you. I do need to work on Lily. I don't know about losing the epilogue, but I could make it less over the top. I just came up with the axe idea when I wrote the line "We couldn't have a real axe?" So Sharon comes back with a real axe to go after Lily. Maybe I could erase the couple and realter altogether and just have her break into the house when no one is home (or no one lives there). That actually might be better because it wouldn't be campy. Then I could keep the campy ending as an alternate ending. I definitely don't want Lily to shut the door on both her and Sharon, but that's not a bad idea.