Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-24186298-20131119081909/@comment-5643552-20131119235106

AscendingNooses wrote: Here's a bit of it. I'm not saying it all in here, though. WARNING: This pasta may contain Stereotypes about countrys, and has content about World War 2. If any of these affect you, please do not read this and go to another pasta. (Begin.)  Have any of you ever noticed that, in Majora's Mask, the moon is oddly like one of Hiroshima's worst day?All of the men and women in Termina were like communists; working together to create a festival for everyone. Japan was a communist country in World War II, andHiroshima also had the bomb drop right on their heads in World War 2 while they were a communist country. The bomb also had the effects similar to Hiroshima - The Moonin the sky hovers around. Slowly falling. Like the bomb. Then, when it hits, the whole land is destroyed (from what everyone presumes), with, again, from what we presume, almostor everyone dying. Majora and Skull Kid represent the Americans in some ways if you think about it, too; greedy, powerful, and rude.He steals Epona and your ocarina infront of Link's eyes and runs off with them.He turns Link into Deku Link, balantantly makes The Moon destroy Termina, and doesn't care in the process.On a different note, the Garo's are similar to the Japanese..If they are not loyal enough to their land and master, they appear to commit suicide with a bomb. The Japanese did this with their swords - Seppeku. (To fill you in;Seppeku is when one warrior would cut themselves across the chest and their organs & Guts would fall out, effectively killing them.)The Garo's master is the Garo Master, and the King of Ikana. The King of Ikana is also similar to the Americans, as shown if Link wear the Captain's Mask before you fight him - He is easily tricked by Link and thinks he are Skull Keeta, and lets his lackeys go at Link, before going himself; as he tries to act strong, and goes at his last chance to kill you.Why else does he give up to you after he is a spirit?The Garo's, however, only give you a bit of information before peforming their own style of Seppeku.After link meet's the Garo Master and quickly defeat him in a fight, The Garo Master himself commits suicide right infront of Link."To die without leaving a corpse, that is the way of us Garo."Knowing full well that he would die, he finished himself off.He leaves Link the Golden Arrows behind - His sign of purity.What no one mentions is that once the Garo's spot a intruder or someone suspicious, they must fight and show their honor.When they kept doing this, they screwed up their military by killing a lot of their men.

Two issues right off the bat:
 * 1) Wall of text. Please break this into paragraphs.
 * 2) Awful grammar. Please read this.

I tend to auto-reject pastas that contain horrible spelling/grammar regardless of subject matter, so if you posted that right now, it would be very unlikely to survive for longer than a few seconds (or whenever I happen to see it). Likewise, if you were to put it through spinoff appeal, it would probably not even be considered until you've revised it to meet the minimum quality standards (i.e. proper spelling, grammar, utilization of paragraphs, et cetera).

Even then, this "story" would probably end up deleted or rejected from spinoff appeal (depending on how you attempt to submit it) due to the myriad of issues with the writing. I mean, unless this is just an extremely rough sketch of what you're planning to write, or an idea you spent five minutes jotting down so you wouldn't forget to use it later, in which case you probably should have fleshed it out so that it's at least semi-readable before sharing it here. Right now, it looks like an ill-conceived, borderline incoherent theory pasta and doesn't even come close to meeting the standards.