Talk:It Only Meant Love in 1350/@comment-26193563-20150427220847

The title doesn't make any sense, seriously. The number 1350 doesn't appear in this pasta.

The story starts off as a traditional high school pasta that is used by bestselling books around the world, and there it be. The two falling in love is predictable, but doesn't affect the story in a negative way.

Then the narrator tells her mother about the "argument." That was unexpected, and should have been given a full backup of it, as there was no indication that the two were going to have a huge quarrel. There is absolutely no reason why Mallory left the school, as her staying there might have helped her target the narrator a bit more easily?

Since this part wasn't clear, I had to guess some things: apparently Jessie said/did soemthing outrageously evil that offended Mallory/hurt her feelings, as what was written across the nametag.

The ending finished strongly, suggesting that Mallory has always been following Jessie around. Pretty creepy if that was in real life.

So, overall: the plot is creative, and has promise, but was unclear and too vague. The reader has to make assumptions about the most important parts of the pasta, without any confirmation if that was right or wrong. There are some awkward phrasing that should be fixed.

I sort of liked it, not really. I couldn't make out head or tail of it.

6.5/10