Talk:Personal Demons/@comment-26054278-20151011015151/@comment-26423665-20151016170521

Thank you for the review and the constructive criticism within. I've given the story a bit of a rewrite with the focus on character progression so you don't feel like you're reading the diary of a mannequin there for nothing more than to allow the story to continue. Hopefully the main character now feels like an actual human being you can actually feel something for.

Unfortunately there's little more I can do to make it feel less ripped off from "Tulpa". They both use similar concepts and "bad guys" though I've tried to go about it a very different way, with the main character going in for different reasons, willingly and fully knowing (to his understanding) what a tulpa is. There's also not much I can do about the mention of a tulpa forum (though they are out there) though I've tried to reword that particular part to make it sound less laughable, simply mentioning that here was a website that happened to come with a forum makes it feel less forced to my mind.