Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28794220-20160828074931/@comment-24101790-20160828110548

You repeat a lot of the same issues present in your other stories so I would advise against posting it as it's below our quality standards due to a number of punctuation (punctuation missing from dialogue), capitalization (dialogue not properly capitalized, names left uncapitalized), wording (a lot of awkward wording), and story issues that have already been mentioned in your previous posts.

If this looks familiar, it's because it's what I posted on your original thread because you have done nothing between these versions. Please don't waste our time if you're unwilling to spend your own time on a story.