Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26431631-20160515054058

Plz note that this was written two months before I knew of this wiki, so don't accuse me of copying someone's ideas, and that any cliches (including the red eye one) it's too late and changing it would mess up the story. I'll awase remember that awful day, the day that ruined me for ever. It was when my brother, Andy, left on what was supposed to be the boat ride of his life. It was a bright and sunny day,and I never expected a tragedy to strike. But one did strike, and it struck hard. I had just turned away from the ship, called the SS.Anne as it sailed away, Already missing my brother and craving some delicious chocolate cake when I saw it; blood red eyes, glowing in the shadows of a nearby bush. Curious, I approached, but the next moment ,the sky crackled, and the creature vanished. I looked up, and to my surprise, a storm rolled in and thunder was crackling in the gray clouds. I turn to look at the ship,alarmed. Then it happened; A bolt of thunder, brlliant blue and yellow, striking the tall, lean mast of the ship. Fire, bright orange and yellow, tipped with blue flickers from the crow's nest and spreads, wrapping the boat in it’s fiery tongues. Moments before the SS.Anne sinks into the sea, I catch a glimpse of a boy in shining blue jacket. My brother. As I watched the ship slide beneath the water, I was only able to process one thought: My brother was on that ship. unable to register anything else, I fell to my knees, the word fading in and out. three days later, it was confirmed that no survivors existed- the boat had claimed all of the lives of the people within, including my brother. I sat in my room for days, grief stricken and only accepting the company of my cat, Shimmer. It was only a month later, when I had recovered somewhat that I remembered those blood red eyes in that bush. And for some reason, I just couldn't shake the connection between the scarlet eyes and my brothers death. The next time I saw those eyes was almost a year later, when I was playing with my younger sister Jenna in the woods. Jenna had run ahead of me, and I was trying to catch up, when suddenly, there it was. The same blood red eyes, unblinking and malicious. My mind, still fragile from Andy’s death, shattered as I remembered what had happened last time those scarlet eyes had made an appearance. My eyes fell onto Jenna, who was staring at me. “Amy, what's wrong?” she asked. It was then that I noticed the sleek golden panther, stealthily approaching my sister. “Jenna, NO!” I cried, leaping for her. I was too late. Already, the huge beast had thrown itself upon Jenna, tearing at her, biting her until she screamed the life out of her soul. I was screaming too, pain filling me and tearing my heart into shreds as If I was the one being ripped to pieces, which I was, internally. It’s over in mere minutes and the Panther turns on me, growling. Frightened, I turn and run, heading for my home. I would have let myself die there if it wasn’t for one thing: My remaining brother and sister, who will be devastated by Jenna's sudden death. I have to be there to protect them from the horrible red eyes. I managed to get to my home before collapsing in tears, and the whole community went out to look the panther as I stayed behind, sobbing for my sister.I drowned that night. Not in water, but in an infinite sadness, engulfing me and choking out the light for an eternity. My sister's remains were never found, and left my neighborhood shocked and grief stricken, for everyone loved Jenna. My parents were taking it badly as well; It must be awful to lose two children in the space of two years. By now, I was certain the red eyes had something to do with my siblings deaths. They haunted me, chasing me in my sleep and leering at me as I tried to escape from the darkness. It went on for days, months, years, until finally it made its appearance once again. It was years after Jenna died, and I was 14. I had a habit of keeping my remaining siblings close to me when I went out of the house. My parents had left for a conference meeting at their work, and Allie and Mark had convinced me to go outside. For the first time, out in the front yard, I felt light, and the black faded to grey. Perhaps, I thought, the red eyes were done with me, and I would never see them again. But no matter how hard I try to convince myself, I can’t. Well, I was right. For when I looked up to sky, feeling the warmth, It appeared to me again, tauntingly eyeing me from the fence before vanishing once more. Alarmed, I whip around, but Allie and Mark looked fine. For the next ten minutes, nothing happened. Then I remember my parents, who were supposed to go to their meeting. Without a word, I race to the family phone and ring the number. No reply came, even after I called twenty times. I slumped down into a chair, feeling something terrible has happened to the two of them. Finally, after hours of worrying, my mom phoned us with terrible news. According to her, their car had crashed on the highway. She had made it out unharmed, but my father didn’t make it. “Wait for me at home.” she said sadly. “I’ll come for you when the hospital lets me out.” Devastated, I lay on my bed, tears streaming down my cheeks without stopping. Half my family, gone. I slipped back into the darkness, the blood red eyes clearer than ever, chasing me, on and on. I barely noticed when my mother returned later that night. Allie and Mark rushed to her immediately, sobbing with her, but I remained where I was, unable to feel anything but overwhelming sadness. Days went on, and I couldn’t attend my father’s funeral, as trapped as I was. Andy, Jenna and my father. Why were they all taken away from me? I asked the red eyes these things as it glared at me in the shadow, over and over again. The eyes did not answer;They simply looked on, cold and uncaring. By now there was no hope of recovering- I sank deeper and deeper into the darkness, with only my remaining family to hold onto. I wasn’t free from the murderous eyes, not by a long shot. It was only six months later when the much hated eyes appeared again. I was with all of my family, visiting the graves of our loved ones. I was miserably staring at Andy’s gravestone when it appeared in the shadow of the stone. I didn’t even have time to blink when the earthquake struck. Big cracks appeared on the ground and under our feet, and I barely had time to grab Allie and move away before Mark and Mom fell in, silent with terror. “No...” I whispered. I tried to jump in and reach them, but Allie stopped me, terror written all over her deathly white face. “They can’t have survived that fall. there’s nothing we can do for them.” she whispered. I trembled, unable to take it any more. That night, it was decided by the government that I could stay with Allie at our home,(which survived the quake) because Allie was eighteen. Now I was really upset. The depression had already been bad before, but it turned worse; I stayed in my dark room at all times, never going out. Those awful red eyes glared more menacing than ever in my world of dark, and I almost never ate or slept. I dropped out of school, hid away from the outside world. I knew nothing but shadow and sadness, tormented by the images of the eyes that brought it all down upon me, and the faces of those I lost. Allie dropped out too, doing her best to keep us alive. Although no company would take her in, she scavenged for food and got water from a nearby river, keeping us sad but alive. It remained like this for a while, with me in a sad stupor and Allie trying to hold us together. The haunting eyes didn’t bother me until two years later, when I was sixteen, and Allie was eighteen. That day, Allie had insisted I come and help her gather food, so I grudgingly, agreed. Desperately,I hoped that I would not see the horror that took away my family again, and to my relief, they didn’t appear once as I hunted for edible berries and nuts at the edge of the forest. Later that night, as we camped out and sat together by a fire, I decided to tell Allie about the red eyes that had plagued the family for eight years. She was slumped by the makeshift tent, shadow hiding half of her face. Nervously, I approached. “Hey, Allie?” She looked up, surprised. “Yeah, Amy? What is it?” The emptiness of her eyes tore at the bit of soul left in me, and I blurted it all out, about the red eyes, how I’d first seen them before Andy died, how they caused the deaths of our whole family. By the time I was finished, I was sobbing .I looked up at Allie, who had been silent the whole time I spoke. She was silent for what seemed an eternity. Finally, she looked up;I was shocked to see her face beak in a maniacal grin. “Oh, I’m very glad you told me.” She sneered. Frightened, I took a step back. “Allie, what's wrong with you?” I cried. “This isn’t you!” Allie’s grin only got wider. “Allie is dead. She has been dead since the day you first saw me.” And then her face changed. Her eyes and mouth widen and change color- within seconds, I’m staring at the face that haunted me since I was ten; glowing viciously on my sisters once normal face. I stare, my mouth gaping open in horror. “Allie! You’re-you’re the red eyes!” I stammer. Allie (or was the red face?) laughed. “Like I said, Allie is dead.” It snickered. “There is only me now, the red eyes, that bring death and misery wherever I go, feeding upon the souls of the dead. But my target was never truly your family, Amy. My target… was you.” I staggered back in shock. “M-me?! If I was your target, why did you not kill me before?” I asked. The red face merely laughed a high, cruel laugh. “I grow stronger on the souls of those who are depressed and have fallen into the deepest chasms of despair. The deaths of your family was intended to drop you into these depths, until you were utterly hopeless. Then I would feed upon you… Did you not notice, Amy, that the deaths occurred directly after you were beginning to reenter the light? Each one of these scenarios drove you deeper and deeper into the shadows… I had planned to abandon your sister's body and drive you completely over the edge and kill you tonight, but you began to confide in me about your fear, and it was too risky to try to drive you down further at that point, because confiding in something to someone lessens the shadow in your heart…” shaking harder than ever, I took another step back. “And wh-what will you do once you kill me?” I asked. The red eyes grin got wider. “I will target another soul and force them through the same ordeal as you did, and do the same to another soul, and other after that, and so forth for eternity.” It says cruelly. “You are only my first victim!” Suddenly, Allie’s body leaped at me; I barely managed to tumble out of the way. Without hesitation, I made a beeline for the trees, thinking the same thought over and over. I’m the only one who knows about this. I have to stop It before it strikes again. I chance to look up, and ahead of me, the cliff side looms, the moon shining brightly against the midnight blue sky. I run as far as I can without falling off the cliff and skid to a stop, panting. The darkness that was evoked by the deaths of my family was still there, threatening to drop me into deepers prisons, but this time, I have a thought to hang on to. I have to tell someone. I have to stop this creature, before it ruins another poor soul like mine. I cannot allow another child to go through what I have gone through, all of these years. I continue to run, on and on until I reach a high cliff side. A girl, about thirteen or so is standing there, gazing at the dark sky. The moment I reach her, I grab her shoulder and shake her. " what are you doing?! Get out of here! Now! GO!!" I stand in front of her, glaring into her confused eyes. She opens her mouth as if to speak, but suddenly the ground between the two us begins to crack, until it falls completely. The younger girls eyes widen in shock, and her hands reach for mine; for a moment, time seems to slow down, giving me every detail of the moment. The girls crisp blue eyes and light brown hair; her fingers just missing my own. Then time speeds up again, and I plummet. A dark aura surrounds the top of the cliff, and I can no longer see the girl. The last thing I see is the blood red eyes, a triumphant grin in it's face, and someone turns the lights turn off. 