Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20181206012011/@comment-10502460-20181212005349

BloodySpghetti wrote: I think the story is all fine, but you know, it's kind of light for horror... maybe if you added a bit more details in regards to the result of the bombing.

Also, these guys don't come off as proud Irish people, they sound rather none British Islander in their speech.

I was trying to avoid making their speech too caricatured so I tried to avoid putting in to many "lads" or "ye's" and what not. You do too much of that without really knowing what you're doing, and it's kind of like having an African American character who can't go two sentences without using the N-word.

I do want to add a couple more grizzly details to the results of the bombing, without going over the top.