Talk:In the Woods/@comment-26030957-20150309193013

Lovely. Absolutely lovely.

You develop your character in the opening four paragraphs superbly. The scene with the female jogger was funny but also an excellent way to display character.

I found this pasta to have the perfect amount of rising tension and gore. It flowed well and you never lost yourself in useless descriptions of scenery that didn't move the story along.

Little gems like this, "The wind is blowing softly through leaves and branches, which whistle a sepulchral tune under the breeze's gentle touch" made it a joy to read.

Of course the ending just made it. Though it was funny, it still remained creepy since you describe him as "morbidly obese". Ending it with the word "mouth-hole" also leaves the reader with a pretty creepy image.

This reviewer found this pasta to be short, sweet, creepy and very, very fun.

One teeny, tiny little thing, twice you say, "Heart beating fast on his chest" when I think the preposition you want to use is IN- Heart beating fast IN his chest.