Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25623211-20141104184838/@comment-25051266-20141106212511

A very good short story, I like it.

You should change "twelve time" to "twelve o'clock" the former just doesn't seem right.

Also you should alter "my world could not be ended so easily" to "my world could not have ended so easily" the first one doesn't seem to make sense and just sounds odd.

Overall this is a nice, short and sweet story, well done.