Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25913561-20141223131636/@comment-25148755-20141223192923

I'm with Umbrello. I actually liked this a lot more than I thought I was going to. The fact that you kept it unclear whether or not He exists is probably the biggest reason this works as well as it does.

There are a few slightly rough patches throughout but nothing too bad. I agree that the last few paragraphs where she reveals what has actually been going on need the most strengthening.

The OCD tendencies are a nice touch. Nice first effort.