Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4849011-20160604033711/@comment-25569708-20160712214045

Okay, just got done with the new part. The only thing that I think might be an error is "“Heaven know we don’t", which you may have intended to be "“Heaven knows we don’t". Other than that this new part seems to be error-free to me. The writing is once again done well, and the dialogue between characters feels natural and flows quite smoothly. Scenes are again described well and not really anything is at fault here structurally.

Compared to the last part in the series, this story kind of feels like a "cool-down" entry. After all the drama and soul-searching of Band of Brothers, this part felt rather laid-back and jovial at times. It was interesting to see the superpowered crime-fighting badasses just kind of sitting around eating food and watching "whimsical" movies (So did they go with The Muppets or Sleeping Beauty? I'm dying to know!). It's good to know that outside of Basilisk work, these guys can pretty much do normal-people things. I think that's an important thing to show in this series especially, due to the humanizing way the characters are dealt with. It was nice to see the characters bounce off each other for a bit.

I liked how this part had Daniel out for the majority of it, since the last focused so much on him and his joining of Basilisk it was refreshing to have Daniel himself out of the picture for a while and just let these other characters conversate and socialize a bit. It was also good to hear some more about the specifics of Daniel's "experiments" by his captors. The "tests" obviously seemed cruel and traumatizing, but I could actually kind of see why his captors would want to to test Daniel in these ways. They intended to test his breaking point with his new-found powers, not just torture him just for the sake of being "evil bad guys". This makes them seem like realistic antagonists with actual motives. And finally, hearing Daniel's love for his family was intriguing and gave him some more depth as a character.

Also I found this quote by Missy thought-provoking:

''“Now that I know about the man, one thing that strikes me is how unnecessary this all is. He wants to be a hero, and you said he can be arrogant. What do you want to bet that if these creeps had approached him and told him, ‘Hey, we can make you a superhero if you can pass some tests,’ he would have jumped at the chance?”''

I think the point of this quote is to question Daniel's allegiance to Basilisk, and I think Missy has a point here. Because of his past immature attitude and displayed hostility to Ripley, I can't help but think that perhaps Daniel's devotion (no pun intended) to Basilisk may be tested in future Houseguest parts. I know that Daniel's aggression and stress comes from his traumatic experiences, but nonetheless I think his mindset will be a hurdle for him in the future. I think Daniel's going to find himself in a spot where he's got to prove his worth to Basilisk.

The only thing I'm unsure of in this part is where Missy and Kent came from. It's been a bit since I read the other Houseguest stories, so perhaps it's just me not remembering something about Basilisk going to see them. Apologizes if I'm missing something here.

But yeah anyways I thought this was a pretty nice entry in the series; a more relaxed and dialogue-based one. And also I'm interested in finding out what the "Are you still ready" part is about at the end (Something in me says it spells trouble, but maybe I'm reading too much into it). Nice job here!