Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27905100-20161116221352/@comment-24101790-20161118004015

As it's going into the collab., I would be more focused on reviewing the other entries and ground rules to see if it meshes with the tone/focus of the story. I didn't see too many major issues other than some basic ones ("“Yes?” she said(period missing)" and breaking up the paragraph starting with "I found my room easily, and put the key in the lock. ..." as a typical paragraph is around 5-10 sentences) and the story seems up to QS, but as it's a collaboration, there are other factors at play here like theme, style, and setting.