Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190515084101/@comment-26475800-20190515132617

"'The next line isice melts into blood. That's Revelations 8, eight and nine'" - is ice

Okay, so that was the only typo I found with this. I like this story a lot, but the only problem I have with it is that it isn't that scary. I think you did one hell of a job writing a dystopian story, it's great. It has a Fahrenheit 451 feel to it, but that's mostly because you focused on baned books. But it was a very good story. Just think it needs to be a little scarier.