Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-23872426-20180816040637/@comment-23872426-20180817222024

Thank you guys for your honest opinions! I really do appreciate it, you've helped me pit out a lot of what needs to be worked on :)

Wanted mainly to try a bunch of different things this time around (accents, multiple character narration, etc.), so thank you all for covering those bases. I obviously need to do a lot more work on it.

Just out of curiosity, was it the ending itself or just the fact that it got too long that bogged down the story? I have a tenancy to overwrite little things so I'm wondering if perhaps that was the case?

Once again, thank you all for taking the time to read this and give your thoughts!