Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-40151278-20190715115832/@comment-9041013-20190715152629

All of this is also very confusing, on top of everything that Ned said. I couldn't understand who speaks, to whom and about what. It was just way too convoluted due to bad English and weird styling. Everything is all over the place and I still don't understand how all of this even starts. Who are the characters, what happens to the parents, who's Annie... why?

To top it all of, deformities don't work like X-Men, you might on ocassion get some "super ability" but not to the extent of getting overly oxydized in a matter of moments in an event of exposure to normal amounts of oxygen due to have an increased natural lung capacity. Also, that hand, skin deformity thing; it's just going to leave him with a useless and very painful part of the body. Not just be disgusting. You don't seem to understand how important every organ is.