Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25907694-20150120183338/@comment-25907694-20150127153828

First of all, thanks, for taking the time to read this meh story, really nice of you. So, i stumbled upon this idea and thought maybe it would work? Also, totally forgot about the Zeke 'Wayne' thing, it wasn't even supposed to be that. That was pretty stupid. Another thing, If i dont use the parents, there would be no one to choose who to save. If i chose the parents, Zeke would have to have another brother who chooses whicever parent to save. This is supposed to set up Zeke so he can have a bird's eye perspective. Since i'm not going to finish the story, probably, ill tell you the ending. Following the events after, Zeke would see his parents (from a hidden camera) make the decision on who to choose. This is basically mental torture, and he might have some selfish thoughts, even, but disregard them immediately. Then, he would feel sadness, despair, start to be hopeless. Eventually, he would be in a state of just, bland emotion, maybe. After, he finds himself in a cell, in the "lair" (the villain calls it that, so, take that up with him), and he's still sad, but he notices a key in his pockets. It's the key to the cell, and he escapes when he sees an open door, with a body inside. The body is of Luke (Luke had a twin brother, this guy is the 'good' twin, the real one), but he's dead. (I hope this idea isn't too far out there) By this point, Zeke is pretty confused, and he sees the fake luke, or the villain luke, sleeping and sees his chance. Tries to strangle him, luke is strong though, and he breaks free, then they fight. Zeke barely wins, and he only has enough strength to leave to get help, but he starts to think. Does he really want to live? He doesn't even recognize his parents. Then, he will have a moment of doubt, because his brother is still alive, but realizes his brother is not there, and is in the other location the villain luke has placed him. He is happy to die, and he falls asleep. He then wakes up in a hospital, with his parents and the villain luke there. villain luke acts like the good luke "defeating" the bad guy. His parents are totally unaware that they were being watched by their son. Zeke is mortified and scared and all sorts of stuff.

Yeah, so that's the ending, i think this would be better suited for a movie and stuff. But, about the villain, i didn't put much thought into him. I paid more attention to the plot twists and things like that. The part i wrote was kind of the boring part. Also, i wrote more, before the videogame talk in the beginning of the story. But i took it out, because, it didn't feel right there. It was some background stuff on Zeke. Actually, Zeke was joking around with his parents about changing his first name to Bruce or something i dont know. I overlooked the fact that his last name was related to the story that influenced my story. Sorry about the mistakes, and again, thanks for reading my story, as confusing as it was.