Talk:Unknown Number/@comment-5000412-20140103054144

Have to admit, I didn't see that ending coming. The way the story used objects to surprise was rather different than the common "THE MONSTER'S ALREADY IN THE BED" ending.

I'm not sure if it's intended or not, but a few words are set as headings of sort, which took me out of the story a bit when seeing them. Also, though it may not seem to be anything, there are a number of unnecessary spaces in the writing, which also affected the experience in a small, but significant way.

With both of these in mind, the main issue of the story is the formatting, which is important in making a presentable story which is easy and enjoyable to read.

Good story though, and I encourage the writer to continue.

-E