Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20181002204802/@comment-36393004-20181003010953

Kolpik wrote: This is in no way a commentary on your other stories on the site, but this is on another level. It's cool to see you getting into the groove of your craft and improving. Isn't this site so freakin' awesome?

You've peppered in hints that she's been at it for a while trying to sell the place with no luck. Yes, the story is subtle, but nothing a second read won't fix. The story offers enough hints and is short enough that I think plenty of people will read it again if they're not quite sure. That's what I did and it was better and much more revealing on that second pass.

There seems to be a double space before the last sentence in the second paragraph, so take care of that. I think it's ready for the site, but let it stew in the WW for a while if you aren't quite sure yet. Good job on this, really, it's a nice little read. Thank you, this idea was swimming in my head all day until I finally put words to it. I am so glad you enjoyed it. I will fix the spacing issue, probably happened when copy/pasting between word pad, grammarly, and here.