Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180623102805/@comment-26444017-20180623213646

I think you're mistaking the motivation of the lead. He's not psychopathic. He clearly feels emotions. His problem is obsession. He's obsessed with murder, and voyeurism of it, and he's obsessed with Julia to the point of trying to track down a serial killer because he's worried that he's losing her. Clearly, Julia doesn't actually feel anything for him: It's all one-sided.

I also tried very hard to make it seem like the story would move forward as normal when the events of the last few paragraphs were written. Thinking about it more, I guess I could just scrap the scene where she lures him with the ruse of sex, mostly because even I thought it was a bit unrealistic. Beyond that, I'm torn between concluding at the same spot or continuing on for a bit, leaving the ending somewhere else.

I will say that I am satisfied with the last paragraph, and still think that it's a good way to end the story. As for the lead-up, I'm not sure. Yes, some changes need to be made, I just need to figure our what and how best to implement them.