Talk:Leaves/@comment-35711173-20180710060635

Wizard Of The Woods,

That's a pretty accurate summary for me too. Paragraph 4 sounds too similar to an NDE I had oh about 25 years ago. It feels like something NDE related, or at least inspired by an account of an NDE. I was pretty darn sure what was going to happen all the way through in paragraph 4. By the end of paragraph 6 when we had the name on the leaf I was 100% sure.

George and Reggie seem rather flat. There's not a lot of space to develop them and since they are minor characters there is no need, but they still feel flat.

Why does there have to suddenly be 20 people dropping dead? People do die every day. Why isn't this just her experience in transitioning to death?