Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29458657-20160805183834/@comment-24101790-20160805190545

Starting with the basics, please do no indent paragraphs. While it is correct in all forms of literature, on the wiki format, it causes the issues you've just seen with the white boxes. Onto why the story was deleted, it was deleted because it wasn't up to quality standards.

Spelling: "he felt on the stairs and broke his head.", "Lerry, who was found dead at the entrance with his eyes gauged (gouged) out.", "Joseph fells (feels) an anger he can’t comprehend.", "He shoots her in the neck and she releases (releases) her gun, falling to the floor.", etc. There are a lot of other typos present in the story so I suggest carefully proof-reading your next story.

Wording: There are a lot of issues/inconsistencies here. I'm going to go out on a limb and assume English isn't your first language based on these errors. I suggest getting someone who is fluent in English to help you. "By contrast, it was the perfect place for hunting as a ghost.", "This is definetively not the most interesting question he could put me (sic) and also not one where I could come with a good answer.", "But if we want to survive and make justice, we must be united.", "They always make fun and not take it seriously when I ask them about the current events.", etc. There are a lot of other instances of this here.

Awkward wording: "The set of apartments I live in has never been a too nice place to live", "There were knive cuts that used to line the walls and make out words, words I do not want to write here.", "Yesterday, an older woman was found shackled to death in the elevator." (People don't die of being shackled, they die of starvation, dehydration, exposure, etc. Saying someone was shackled to death doesn't make much sense without explanation.), "He is one of the most friendly (people) in the entire neighborhood.", "He never had the qualities of an administrator, what about the qualities of a detective?" (I'm not sure what you're implying here, what is he an administrator of? Are you possibly using a word that means something different than the English definition of an administrator: a person responsible for running a business, organization, etc. How does the previous interaction imply anything about his administrator capabilities? There are a lot of instances of awkward wording that doesn't sound right. I suggest getting someone to help you proof-read your story.

Punctuation: "I got to the office in a hurry as this had to be interesting(period missing)". You also started out the story using dashes in place of quotations, but changed it over. Both are correct, but I will mention that in the previous entry, you combined a number of dialogues accidentally by putting them on the same line and forgetting to use dashes correctly.

Story issues: There needs to be a lot more description in the story. Lines like: "He shoots her in the neck and she relieses her gun, falling to the floor." and "Then I hit him in the head with the bat and I take his gun. I get up and point it at him." really come off as bland without description or build-up. They're handled in a very dry manner and that makes the story comes off as un-interesting.

Story issues cont.: "I shut up, pondering on the situation and then say one of the most absurd things I've ever said in my life: ... "Yes. The block is killing everyone. It wants to be left alone."" How does the protagonist come up with this conclusion. Up to that point, they thought it was a serial killer, what evidence is present to make him assume the block is a living thing that is influencing people to kill. Additionally if the block has sentience, why is it only infecting a few people over a period of decades rather than everyone?

Story issues end: There are other issues, but I think I've given enough for you to start on. A large issue is the end. "I sit here and decide to hide under the bed. But before I could do that, I feel wet patting on my shoulder." The protagonist is writing all of this, so how is he typing that last line if it's obvious someone is present with him and means him harm. It seems odd that he'd end his typing there, and if he was murdered, who posted the story, and why? On a final note, all of these issues were present in your previous story "The Map That Changed Me" so I would suggest taking your next story here first as you've overlooked quite a lot of issues in both stories and if this continues, your next story will likely be deleted for the same reasons.