Talk:The Accuser/@comment-25383866-20150118164938

You have an interesting premise, but the writing was very hamfisted in its delivery. There was no subtlety to your descriptions- i.e., "The stick turned out to be a scythe," and "But not typical scars, the scars were shaped as a pentagram." The writing was sloppy and had an air of unfinishedness about it, particularly in the numerous places where punctuation and grammar were just absent.

Don't be discouraged, though. The best way to better your own writing is by reading other people's work. I learned from Stephen King's descriptions of small-town minutiae, from Chuck Palahniuk's unorthodox philosophy and analogies, and Kurt Vonnegut's brilliant and credible depictions of the incredible, to name a few.