Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36960218-20180920154831/@comment-36627132-20180920172057

DrBobSmith wrote: This story would be tagged Delete Now because it is on the forbidden topics list (haunted program or file like SONIC.AVI or SONIC.EXE)

On the good side, your spelling, grammar, punctuation, formatting and other mechanical issues seem pretty close. I see mistakes but people in the Workshop would help you with a solid story at this level of error.

There isn't enough imagination to the story. I almost said that there is no imagination to the story.

Where do you live (Nation will do.)

Do you have any family stories of horror? This can be legends from the old countries or things your ancestors did?

Are there scary things around your current environment? Perhaps a frightening street gang, weird homeless people, an abandoned office building full of crack addicts, etc?

Have you ever had a really, really frightening experience, perhaps one where you narrowly escaped death. (Two of my stories come from this) Agreed. Plus the I'm dead ending is cliche and undesirable to everyone.