Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-17739056-20140704170557/@comment-17739056-20140723142956

Rinskuro13 wrote: Oh yeah, and my 'help' to help you improve in future...even though you're not working on it anymore I guess.

1. Get rid of the stuttering. One or two stutters only will do the job.

2. Replace the comma in the last sentence with a semicolon or dash. Whichever you prefer. Thank you :) I am still working on it I just didn't want tons of comments because I wanted to make the changes I knew I had to make. The second draft might not be up for awhile though, because I'm busy writing scripts for my YT channel and I have a lot of other things I want to do during the rest of summer break. But it could be up maybe near the end of August.