Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150422165839/@comment-26326346-20150425234705

Thank you! I really appreciate the feedback. This will definitely be revised.

I just looked over the story by Edgar Allan Poe, it does seem similar and that's a bit of a let down for me. Any suggestions on not making the warden so oblivious? Would removing a scene of the blood be a good way to go? And maybe make it to where he doesn't see one or two of the "guards" clearly because of the poor lighting?

I tried to insert a bit of a red herring by mentioning that the prison was rumored to be haunted and having him think of ghosts, should I expand on that a bit more?

After I implement your suggestions, would you be willing to look over the revision(s) for me? It'd mean a lot to me, because I'm actually really proud of the story myself (although discovering it is similar to another one has put a bit of a damper on that feeling).

Once again, I really appreciate the feedback and kind words!