Talk:The Final Fate of Mary Ford/@comment-25148755-20161208050254

Finally continuing my promised prize of reviews for the top finishers of my holiday contest last year. And boy, am I glad I did. This was a great piece. The logic and thoughts seemed perfectly in line with what you'd expect for a bratty little girl. The descriptions were enough to paint a complete picture but not so great that they weighed down the narrative. I felt actual emotion as I read during the story's climax which is something I rarely experience lately, so well done on that. I agree with Dupin that this was an emotional roller coaster with the suspense leading up to the tracks being handled particularly well. If I have one small criticism it's that I slightly dislike that the ghost parts of the story are told in the past tense (rather than the present). I feel it'd add another element if the reader didn't know whether or not she would move on or not. Overall though, extremely well done and, since your "Plagiarism of Michael Nemeth" got removed, I'm going to have to nominate this one for PotM.