Talk:Will You Love Me/@comment-25000365-20150702185413

Not a terrible story, but there are lots of little grammar mistakes (which might be fixed after I type this comment). I also think that the story would have been better without the little section with the jogger. However, I really like the idea of the story. 7/10

P.S. If this is taking place in Central Park, that means we're in New York, which is in the US. In the US, they don't use the 24 hour clock. 21:44 should be 9:44 P.M. Just a little minor thing that didn't detract from the story.