Talk:Chatroom 98/@comment-29249491-20160724055521

For god's sake, people stop writing stories framed with a dude in an asylum telling his warning. They suck, they suck so damn hard.

Apart from the framing device, the thing has a lot of junk writing like this "  nanosecond of a nanosecond,". . . .really dude? Just...fucking really?

Also, the caps don't help. If you can't make it -feel- like caps, you did it wrong. And actually, those last two lines feel like caps, so using them ruined what was already fine.

Then there's the superlatives, and I swear, immediately and insane should be auto-flagged for human review, or just rejected outright.

I don't hate the idea, even the kid thinking it's a bot when it's older than chatbot programs. . . because kids don't know things like that. Go ask a 15 year old how long Youtube has been around, they probably think it's been around their entire life, or even longer. Go ask a 15 year old when cellphones were invented, or 3D gaming, or anything like that, stuff around computers has changed so freaking fast I can totally buy any screw-up a kid makes insofar as technological anachronism. . . but just because the central conceit works, doesn't mean anything else does. Nothing in this story is held up by the writing, the premise alone drags it along. It's a good premise, with terrible writing, scene work, and general execution.