Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24957984-20140623145607/@comment-4832646-20140701001521

There are grammar errors and awkward phrases every once in awhile. Whereas its good, the dialogue is rushed and seems cheesy and generic. Also, I think some explanation is due. Judging from what I am reading, this looks like WW1. But there doesn't seem to be a lot of explanation into that.