Talk:Crimson Road/@comment-25326117-20160602024839

1). She, our driver, was stuck in this car with people who were getting sick of said ride after three hours of boring ride through the empty and dark country side.

(I thought adding and would help the sentence flow more smoothly).

2). After passing one of the many speed limit sign, indicating the usual country road ten miles per hour, the car got colder, way too cold.

(In grammar, I believe that you should spell 1-10 in letters, but after that it's all right to resort to numbers.  Someone, correct me if I am wrong).

3). But that was just silly talk, of course.

(I've read in grammar that you never start a sentence with but).

4). And besides this poor girl looked hurt.

(Same rule as in three; never start a sentence with and).

5). The three friends looked at each other with a frown, all agreeing that it wasn’t any one of them.

6).  How did the female driver survive to tell the story of her car, her friends and the mysterious woman in the red veil disappearing?

(Overall, the story has a good theme, it just needs some help.  I don't mind that it's short.  Heck, there are a lot of great stories that are short like The Hook urban legend.  It would be nice to describe the mysterious woman in the red veil more deeply.  It was good that the author described the mysterious hitchhiker "Her fine legs wobbled a little, but soon she was walking over to the car, joining the others in the now kind of cramped car,"      and    "The driver got out of the car and walked carefully over to the woman with the' red, almost opaque veil covering her face',      looking at her."  However, I still wonder what she was wearing.  She wasn't out in the weather with just a transparent and red veil on, right?  ''