Talk:The Endeavor/@comment-26054278-20150719173647

(For June/July Demon/Devil Contest)

I’m impressed. This is not only great, this is absolutely brilliant.

I’ll start by talking about the fact that not only did I not notice any typos, but I didn’t notice any English errors at all. In terms of technical writing, this is top-notch.

Of course, the plot itself is not only clever, but also paced really well. We slowly learn more about what is happening and the backstory of the character not just simply being told in the mind of Matthew, but also by the Devil at parts when he was talking about Lydia. It was an excellent way to develop the character of Matthew.

Speaking of characters, I love the portrayal of the Devil here. Although I have seen versions of the Devil that poke a bit of fun at people, I think this one was different enough from those examples. In addition, the humor here is pretty well written, and I chuckled quite a few times.

The whole thing was creative and new, even though the idea of a writer who murders people isn’t inherently new. However, since that idea wasn’t the twist of the story and was used to further develop the character, it was perfectly fine. Of course, the real twist in the story is incredibly witty and an excellent idea.

The only real problem that faults this story is that this really isn’t very creepy. Sure, the section where we had a glimpse of Hell late in the story was surprisingly disturbing, but the rest was more humorous than creepy.

Of course, since everything else is so fantastic, I can easily call this a marvelous addition to the contest. 90/100.