Talk:Tobit: From Love Comes Damnation/@comment-25148755-20150409162926

So, I haven't read any of your other Tobit stuff (Other than For Love and Hot Chocolate which doesn't really count) but decided to discount your advice at the beginning and read this one first to see how it stood on its own. Happy to say, it did quite nicely. While there are (obviously) a great number of things covered in the previous two stories, I was able to pick up the gist of most of it from the background you gave here; my understanding will obviously deepen when I read the others, but it's not absolutely necessary.

Regarding the story itself, this was very well done. You did an excellent job crafting the characters, especially Lance...his story arc is a very nicely detailed piece of work. As a Lovecraft fan I was particularly reminded of The Call of Cthulu here, what with ancestor's finding strange idols that no one can translate.

Tobit is honestly one of my favorite creepypasta OC's. This is because you keep him in the distant background of the stories and just gradually reveal more and more about what makes him tick. Very well done.