Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180714064900/@comment-5733573-20180714102528

It's a good story. For the sake of time, I'll focus this comment on what I think needs work.

The conversation at the end feels a little too explainy to me, if you know what I mean. Granted, that's its purpose, but it seems a little bit forced and unnatural. The dynamic is also confusing between the ghosts and the rest of the world: so the exorcise other ghosts and... something else? I would love for that to be clearer.

Apart from that, I think you should make a second pass for word choice. There are places where you've used a pronoun when the full word would be best, some redundancy, etc. Nothing another proofread can't fix.

Overall, really fun story. Never at any point was I able to predict where it was going. And I appreciated some of the clever red herrings in there. Nice work!