Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150422165839/@comment-25226524-20150426142213

I edited this to get rid of a few issues. I dropped the last line about him not speaking to a single guard because he'd actually spoken to the guard he thought was Frank when Frank told him about getting punched during the riot. I fixed some issues you had with sentence splicing. Again, I would advise reading and bookmarking our Style Guide for reference. I think you took care of the issues enough to where I'll let this one pass, but it's possible that another admin may not agree.

If you want to wait to get some more feedback you may be able to further improve the story, but I think it's up to standards as it stands. I'm not saying the story is perfect: it still needs work, but it's good enough in my opinion, so it's up to you what you do with it. I definitely see potential in your writing, so I would advise reading our writing advice blogs under the community tab at the top of the page to help advance your skills and make your next story even better. Keep writing. Good luck.