Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25980873-20160117194430/@comment-26326346-20160122072035

I like what you have written so far and hope that you finish it. You did a great job with the description, building up suspense and the characters. I'm actually hoping that neither of them die, though odds are Marjorie does based upon how the pasta starts. I don't have any recommendations for you other than to finish it. You've got gold here, but you still have to finish mining it. I'm looking forward to the conclusion :D

___________________________________________________________________ There were a couple of grammatical errors. I am going to post a portion of the sentences and then repost them corrected with the changes being italicized (Use CTRL + F to find and replace the errors).

“It seem to take her no effort to pull me…

“It seemed to take her no effort to pull me…

Marjorie inhaled sharply when I place the handkerchief on the gash.

Marjorie inhaled sharply when I placed the handkerchief on the gash.