Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25980873-20160718233750/@comment-26326346-20160726070515

I like the story as is and it is my favorite of your works, so I am somewhat sad to see that you think it "sucks hard". I like how the story posits that there is indeed such a thing as true love, shows it to us, and then cruelly rips that love away. The idea that love is so powerful that it can power spacecraft is rather amusing to me, because us humans would never have such a way to measure love, therefore our space travel would be limited if that were to be how it worked, ouch!

While mystery sometimes works out, I truly think the story actually benefits from the explanation at the end because it highlights that even those who love (the aliens in this case) are capable of being selfish and doing horrible things (seriously, not only did they kill sentient beings, but ones that they knew damn good and well were truly in love and happy together). Do what you will, but I think it's fantastic as is, minus a few grammatical errors and a plot hole which can easily be addressed in my opinion.

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“It try to take us,” Carson replied

change "try" to tried

Vanessa continued on for several minutes, than stopped abruptly as a terrible realization hit her

change "than" to "then"

______________________________________________________________________________________________ Carson going into the woods doesn't make any sense. How could he possibly know that she went into the woods? I think one would be more apt to think that she went into town or had been abducted by the thing. I'd recommend changing it to where Rex's leash snapped from him tugging on it and the broken part of it pointing toward the woods. _______________________________________________________________________________________________

The creature remembered the hearts that were examine before the new ones were chosen. change "examine" to "examined"