Talk:A Simple Cry for Help

Good writing. There are multiple spelling errors, but those are easy to fix; a spellchecker should catch most of the ones I saw. I believe you should take an extra sentence to elaborate on the girl's hand emerging from the trunk - "seemed to grow" just doesn't capture the weird physical implications of the act. Try to describe exactly what the narrator is seeing. Javer80 18:54, December 15, 2011 (UTC)