Talk:Run for Their Lives/@comment-30963088-20170106034253

I couldn't get past the first few paragraphs. The story was choppy and jumped from one subject to another without giving explanations as to what was happening. The writing also seemed forced, as if you were trying too hard to produce a piece with "good writing." For example, you wrote " The arts. If he had died watching it, his wandering spirit would have had his smartly dressed corpse as company. Mitchell was enveloped by the home’s silent calm." I am completely confused as to what the arts means.