Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25454793-20160524114215/@comment-26007602-20160525003521

This story is fairly generic, and it also lacks any real punch. You set up a premise that could be interestingly expanded upon, but then proceed to do nothing with it. Simply describing some vague alien race that wants to kill us isn't very creepy on its own. You need to actually write a story around them, rather than giving us this report about them.

When I say that this is generic, I say that because I've seen this type of story countless times; "alien race creates humans and then wants to kill them for little or no reason". The movie Prometheus, comes to mind, along with the Forerunners of the Halo series. I'm not saying you shouldn't write a story around this, but you definitely need to actually do something with it.

Additionally, this story begs the question as to how the narrator knows all of this information. It's implied that he's human near the end, so how does he know all of this? How does he know this race's average lifespan, but not even have a name for them?

"A lifetime to us, would be half an hour to them.

Let’s say you lived until 100. That would be 1 hour, forty minutes compared to their average lifespan." What relevance does this passage have to anything?  It doesn't further our understanding of the aliens and is fairly inconsequential to the story.

Your grammar isn't bad, so that's a plus, but the story leaves a lot to be desired. Either expand on the premise with an actual plot or scrap this story.