Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26179512-20150309170653/@comment-25148755-20150311162836

The grammar is pretty bad, as earlier commentators have stated. Additionally, I agree that the character of Smiley Face himself is not particularly scary.

I will say that I actually like the twist where it's possible that Smiley Face might actually be the narrator's husband, so I'd keep that. Bottom line though, I won't be able to fully form an opinion on this one until you fix the grammar, spelling, and syntax issues because those are pretty much blocking out any other good points the story could have right now.