Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24946232-20140519105202/@comment-24821182-20140519155019

All right, so we have a build-up now. I think you've what posted so far is decent, but I need to read the whole story before I can comment on whether or not it's good. I still wish you'd reconsider the blog-thing, but if that's mainly just because of my own dislike of stories posted as blogs.

There are some things I consider highly uncharacteristic, for example that Ben stole liquor from his dad, got drunk, and talked about sex with the narrator, which I don't think is very Christian at all.

Also, it goes without saying that you need to proofread.