Talk:Pass the Parcel/@comment-25052433-20150719013137

Well, let's sit back and review this bad boy. Pass the Parcel, and pass the popcorn while you're at it!

Creativity: What can I say, this one was brilliant. Everything about the concept was amazing, original and terrifying. This one kept me going, wanting more and more, as it certainly delivered in every way I could ask. The idea of the "twisting" was what really set this one off on a great path. The idea of twisting something, to distort without destroying, really added that element of subtle fear. Hell, even the word "twisting" has sort of a dark tone, and the way you introduced it with the email to the girlfriend...wow, talk about setting it up for success.

Quality of Story: Simply put, this is a top shelf story. It is apparent from the start that you put a lot of time and effort into not only writing this well, but also making sure that it contained all the elements of horror and fear that a good pasta needs. Not much else to say, this was a homerun.

Quality of Character: The character development was a little light in this one. I could have done with a bit more in the way of telling us about this guy. You didn't really hook me in to a point where I connected with him or cared about his outcome. Still though, this is more of a plot/situation driven story than a character driven story, and you certainly made up for the lack of character development with a whole lot of amazing horror.

Creepiness: This succeeded on every level as far as being creepy goes. Your descriptions, settings and imagery are all spot on. The scene where he watches himself twist up in his bed was executed to perfection, and may very well be one of the best terror scenes I have ever read on this site. The only flaw I could find in all of this is your choice of the Mr. S. angle. That came across as quite cliche and took a bit away from the overall experience. Other than that though, this was an amazing piece of work.

I will agree with Grim on this, and match his score of 75, giving you a total of 150.

Final Score: 150 points.