Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28088262-20140704151238/@comment-9967354-20140704165310

Actually Freaking Blood's idea doesn't sound terribly good. (Sorry). Giving the nurse a reason to kill him sort of ruins the main point of the story. For a rather short creepypasta, the build up really isn't bad. Adding the bit about the old man being evil actually ruins the build-up, and makes the story bland.