Talk:Eyes in the Dark

Starting this to ask you all for your opinion on my pasta. You can be honest, I will appreciate it, but please don't be uneccisarily blunt or rude. I don't mind constructive criticism even if it can be a bit harsh, but don't mindlessly bash please.

Also please take into consideration that its my first pasta and I haven't spent all that much time on it. With that out of the way, whaddaya think?