Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27422558-20151219144141/@comment-24101790-20151219160543

We no longer accept lost episode pastas due to their tendency to reach cliches from earlier stories. I strongly suggest looking over that list as you use a number of them as well.

There are additionally a number of typos ("along to0", "channel at got", etc.), capitalization (not capitalizing proper nouns, capitalizing normal words in the middle of sentences, etc), punctuation (punctuation missing from dialogue, punctuation missing from sentences, commas/colons missing before dialogue, etc), and story issues.

I'm sorry, but there are a lot of issues here and due to the generic plot/re-hashed events (characters crying non-stop, generic lines: " "Steven Gone" "Dead" "No Return".", and shock gore) I don't think this story can be salvaged to the point of passing our Spinoff Appeal.