Talk:Primeval/@comment-26298997-20180307144454

The red eye thing is a little basic. The picture is okay but probably should have been saved for the the reveal at the end. Just not showing the thing at all can be a stronger way of doings things. The story is similar to other things I've read but honestly pretty strong. Maybe it could have been better had it been longer with more buildup. I'm not sure I completely bought them just giving up and saying it was probably something supernatural so soon especially on a site dedicated to nature enthusiasts. I liked how real everyone felt and the creepy vibes you managed to consistently establish. As I stated before this an 8/10 pasta for me.