Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26867018-20151117023156/@comment-27080023-20151117143534

On things I noticed, but maybe you intended it this way, "Sandy and her stud" but they were all guys. Even on a disgusting site like this the users want to know what they are looking for surely?

Also, I thought it was quite good until the end of this particular paragraph, there were descriptions and it seemed to be flowing nicely, then it all seemed in a huge rush to get the story wrapped up. I agree with the Reddit post comment. It just needs bulking up a little in my opinion.