Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20161106130313/@comment-31532017-20161106131711

(before the doctors bought you back in to this world) = (before the doctors bought you back into this world) Typo I presume

(ever will be fades into nothing) = (ever will be faded into nothing) or (ever will fade into nothing) Grammatical error there

Other than that, I really did enjoy reading this story overall.