Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26112993-20150215195456/@comment-25148755-20150215210921

Probably the single most original idea I've seen on the Writer's Workshop. Technically I didn't find anything wrong with this one...you should be able to post this without any fear of deletion.

Two small criticisms: I didn't really buy the whole "make garbage" thing as something that is really "whimsy." It did end up working nicely with him ultimately upping the ante to killing the man though. Also it lead to the very nice last line of dialogue/twist about trying recycling. My biggest critique though was the thing with Julio having been the one to originally find the box. It just felt forced. Part of that was because on my first readthrough I thought Gregory had found the box on the street among the garbage from the bag that had burst (I guess it was actually in the truck though.)  If you could make where he found it a little more explicit, it may make the end of the story a bit smoother.

Anyway, nice work. Look forward to seeing your future stories.