Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20191010220711/@comment-36393004-20191011120419

I had played with the idea of eliminating the first paragraph altogether. I'm glad you brought that up. I might rework the beginning. I like the idea of it starting at the second paragraph. That sounds like a better opening. Maybe include the "would rather wear a mask" idea in that section just to get the point in without it taking a whole paragraph. I think I could do that just as easily with one sentence or less. Thanks for affirming what I already thought.

The ending was a bit rushed too. I mainly knew what I wanted the last line to say. Sorry, I was in a bit of a time constraint. I will look back over that today. I appreciate the feedback though.