Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20181109225741/@comment-35711173-20181109232509

I did a quick proof read. Nothing major but you should consider these.

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He had been raised to give a firm handshake to anyone who offered.

(took out space in handshake)

The heating system poured warm air through the vents and it was like a little piece of heaven Nick had forgotten even existed. (heating system)

After a thirty minute drive, the car turned right onto a path that was beset by large oak trees. (added comma)

Within a few seconds, the trees opened up again to reveal a large clearing in the midst. (added comma)

For every well-dressed man or woman, there was a person of lesser dress to their side. (added comma)

Each of the homeless around him sat eagerly awaiting their meal and within fifteen minutes of idle chatter, the first course was brought to the table. (added comma)

Nick was no exception. His body almost acted of its own will as the portions were shoveled from the dinnerware to his waiting mouth. (Split sentence. Makes more sense)

Just the sight of it made Nick swell with excitement. (make -> made)

One by one, lids were raised to reveal desserts of every imaginable variety. (added comma)

The father rose and smiled at their guests as he toasted to the family and their tradition. (smiled at, not smiled to)

Nick stared around the room at half a dozen men, four women, and two children that could not have been older than fifteen. (older than fifteen)