Talk:I Need to Stop the Knocking/@comment-29502200-20160903232907/@comment-24101790-20160903234912

I gotta say, this could use quite a bit of work.The plot is fine, although a little more so the audience could infer what's happening or why would take the story a bit further and differentiate it from similar premises. A lot of the issues I found with the story come from the way it's written.

"The shading luminescence of pure white fills this gender-less cube" I'm not sure what you mean here as cubes seem to be an object and not really something of discernible sex. It comes off as a bit of a random inclusion given gender's definition unless you mean to infer something else in which you need to go more in-depth with the description.

"A cube of pure quiet, that of which would make the deaf suspicious." The deaf wouldn't be able to discern silence from noise, do you mean to say stillness? It would be like saying the sight was so horrific it'd make the blind panic. It breaks the flow of the description.

"The lack of emotion scares me, yet I fear nothing." seems contradictory. To say he fears this one thing and in the same sentence mention that he has no fears doesn't really mesh together. There are a few other instances of this so I'd suggest reading your story aloud to catch this issues or possibly have someone else read it to help you catch problem areas.

While the story works for the setting (although the cyclical ending feels a bit forced), the writing could use a bit of revision. I'd suggest making use of the writer's workshop for your next story to help clean up some of these issues.