Talk:Ha Ha Tonka/@comment-24881871-20141115182436

There were a lot of redundancies in this pasta. I edited most of them out, but there might still be a few left. The pasta itself was nothing remarkable; although it began to pick up towards the end, the body of the narrative was tedious and wordy, which can scare a lot of readers away. My advice is to thoroughly proofread your pastas before uploading them.