Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9584883-20150109222406/@comment-4849011-20150111020323

You're still doing it! :-) You make the characters seem so human and easy to relate to. It's not just their reactions to what's happening around them and to them; it's also little touches, like Carol noting that her and her husband's texts were private.  My heart pounded when it seemed Carol was in mortal danger, and now I'm fearful for Michael.

There were some typos, but we can deal with most of them later. Here are a few.
 * Part 3- "Only then did he realize how hungry and how full his bladder was" should probably be "Only then did he realize how hungry he was and how full his bladder was" or "Only then did he realize how empty his stomach was and how full his bladder was" - unless, of course, you're saying his bladder was hungry.
 * Part 4- "Who's car we taking?" should be "Whose car we taking?"
 * Part 5- "Tony shook is head" should be "Tony shook his head"
 * Part 6- "Rodger!" should be "Roger!"
 * Part 7- "Photo's" should be "photos" and "No, that it" should be "No, that's it"
 * Part 9- "Minestroni" should be "minestrone", "families" should be "family's" and "visably" should be "visibly".

Also, there were a couple times when you said "strait" instead of "straight", and there's a grammar rule saying you shouldn't start sentences with numbers (That is, you should start with "Ten years earlier" instead of "10 years earlier"). I've heard another one saying not to have apostrophes in decades (1970s instead of 1970's), but I know a lot of people don't follow that one.

In any case, I can't wait to see what happens! How many parts did you say you planned for this to have? Ten-twelve?