Talk:Wind Walker/@comment-5733573-20181228165228

Very well done! No pun intended, but this story is extremely chilling. I loved the way you isolated each of the money lines.

It does have a few flaws. Most of Jack's emotions are told to us rather than letting us see them. Also, the "orifice" sentence doesn't quit make sense.

That said, I was riveted the whole time and the scare factor was as big as the Wind Walker himself. Nice work!