Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24038243-20150505133926/@comment-26007602-20150507182816

If you use the line, "I have heard of the creepypasta monsters like Slenderman, The Rake, Jeff the Killer..." You're going to have some issues. First off, you'll set off the blacklist filter which will delete your story instantly. Second, mentioning the term, creepypasta, in a creepypasta destroys any believability your story might have. Most readers know (or at least should know) that creepypastas are fiction. That's why you can't mention your Night Terror with these other characters; the reader instantly knows it's fiction and won't take it seriously. It honestly also looks fairly dumb admitting your character is an OC in the story.

Besides that and the grammar CrazyWords mentioned, this doesn't come off as an actual story. It feels like you made an OC and wanted to describe it, but didn't know how to put it into a story. You shouldn't really make an OC and then design a story around it; it's a backwards writing technique. That said, there still needs to be a story here, I don't think a description of a beast will pass the quality standards. Also, please try and describe this beast. While it's a nice picture, you shouldn't really rely on it to solely carry your story. Use your words instead and supplement them with a picture.