Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28229401-20160417195512/@comment-27563021-20160421004702

I absolutely loved how it started!! But the rest...not so much.

I really wished it didn't delve into the "spooky demon dripping with blood" territory. This is usually laughable and extremely cliche. I couldn't even read the ending because it was so unappealing to me.

Another thing, the stranger seemed like a nice, peaceful person at the beginning but turned malicious at the end. It would be good for the audience to see the stranger as a benevolent person; taking the beatings with a peaceful face. Maybe afterwards the remaining Guardians would  make the townsfolk fall ill (and you could use that to your advantage and give the townsfolk grotesque boils and swollen tongues and the like).

This story has some real potential, and I'd love to see the finished product.