Talk:Lost Episodes/@comment-29341485-20160810222220

This is much more enjoyable than most of Slimebeast's work. I cannot say that I am an expert in any regard, however some of the scenes did not need to be there. The chubby Star Wars kid was funny, however, it had no place. Personally, I think it would be better if there was not as much sarcasm. This is very prevalent in most of his stories, however there is a time and place for it. None of those times were in this story. I think a better representation of the turning point for Sid needs to be shown.

Also, despite grammar errors, it was not bad. 6/10