Talk:Laughing Jack/@comment-24243395-20131202181440

the narration was a bit choppy, and it all seemed to go too fast..

going from what i read, both mother and son are schizophrenic. laughing jack is one of the little boy's hallucinations, and he imagines he is talking to him, playing with him. he then imagines him placing the action figures, giving him the candy, etc.

this triggers the mother's hallucinations, and without realising it, she kills the dog and stuffs it with candy. she wakes up the next day unaware she had killed the dog and therefore is terrifed by it.

when she hears the moaning through the baby monitor, she has no idea what's happening, when in reality, as she was dozing, she was convinced by hallucinations to kill her son.

she went back to bed, her mind erasing the event as if it had never happened. she then hears the moaning and the laughing, the moaning her son and the laughing her hallucination of laughing jack.

when she goes back to her son's room, she sees his mutilated body on the wall and goes completely phychotic, the hallucination of laughing jack appearing. she attempts to stab laughing jack but he dissapears, and she stabs her son in the chest instead.

i feel this pasta could have been carried out much better if it was in second or third person, as opposed to first.

overall rating: 2/10