Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25239238-20140729071010/@comment-25148755-20140731034728

As an introduction to a story this is fine. It has a bit of a catch to it for the reasons Cassist mentioned; it gets you asking questions. But there really isn't enough substance to it to actually be a stand alone story. If you fleshed it out some more, it could defiitely have potential.