Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25602744-20141031040537/@comment-25602998-20141031075052

Sweet buttery Jesus! Your first pasta? That was amazing for a first pasta! You utilized a tool in horror that most don't use, tension. When I first read the bit with the girl in the rain I thought it would be some generic female ghost, but boy was I wrong. and also this was a police case? you should include that fact because boy oh boy does that leave a lot to the imagination. My opinion is the pasta feels like something is missing but after this I will never look at static spots the same again overall 8/10 a great read.