Talk:Dreams of Inner R'lyeh or How I Discovered the Apocalyptic Behemoth that Killed the World/@comment-25383866-20150118155912

This was a fun one to read. I like the voice you chose for the protagonist. It was very relatable; reading this, I could easily envision this as a conversation between two people. I also liked your analogies, particularly the bit about trying to touch stuff in a 3D movie.

There were a few places though where the writing just stuck for me and I kept going over it in my head. A couple times you repeat sentiments about "What else am I going to but walk?" It doesn't ruin the story but I definitely noticed and it seemed kind of sloppy.

In another instance, Roger tells Pete to go to channel 7 twice. It seemed to me that both thoughts could be combined to give the story a smoother flow but again, it's just a nitpick.

The cursing was a bit excessive. I think that relying on it to convey emotions is a bit lazy, but then I put myself in the context of the protagonist and figured I'd be cursing up a storm too.

Overall, well-done. It definitely reads like an impromptu suicide note to a close friend.