Talk:Blackbirds/@comment-25052433-20140806050655

This was a competent pasta with only a few obvious mistakes.

What went right:

-Creepy idea, that this evil girl lives out in the woods and controls black birds and eats human flesh.

What could have improved my experience:

-Honestly this was just a short and sweet pasta. The main improvement that could come in here is removing the cliff hanger of the protagonist getting shot at the end. It's clear that he lives, since he is telling the story. However, it still serves to tie in the twist that the creature they shot in the beginning was just another poor hunter that had been kidnapped. I suppose the same fate was to be in store for the next dudes.

Like I said, for what it is, this was a quick and fun read.

6.5/10.