Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24841732-20141010150639/@comment-24841732-20141011230403

I appreciate the critisim. Yeah, this was rather rushed as I wrote it during my down time at class. Were there any specific details you felt could be improved?

As for the ending, I'm surprised you found it ambigious. I though it wa rather clear that the protaganist blinded himself to stop the TV, but then the images continued in his head. Nonetheless, I can try to make it clearer.

I'm kind of burntout at the moment, but I plan on going through and editing it later. Any further critisim would be greatly appreciated.