Talk:All Too Human/@comment-34032049-20180116153234

My only issue with this is the first paragraph. It quickly shifts from our AI being in a world of darkness and nothing to having unlimited sight and resources. Now it may be due to the fact that we are witnessing his growth of his intelligence but it comes off as contradictory.

The rest of the story is very hectic and all over the place also but I actually found it to work very well. It simulates the experience an AI with infnite capability would have while learning the history of mankind in seconds. His programmed emotions begin to take effect and you did a marvelous job at letting the reader experience the AI's cognitive process in real time.

As far as a computer viewing mankind's history of war and violence over religion and then deciding to become a god himself, for our sake?

I loved it. Very creative!

An AI is always able to cleary identify the fault of mankind and I was sure that, like any other AI, this one would see that humans are a plague and seek to destroy all humans to perserve the earth blah blah blah but you gave it a different spin and it was very cool.

I have to knock a point for it not being scary at all (simply because this is Creepy Pasta) but dont take that to heart. It has nothing to do with the story itself just where you posted.

and I WOULD knock a few points for jumping back and forth and constantly contradicting the intent of the AI but like I said, in this context it worked so well i actually think it helped the story.

All in all. Nice job man. 9/10