User blog comment:Underscorre/Vote for the Winner of the Jeff the Killer Rewrite Contest!/@comment-4138999-20151121194208/@comment-25941663-20151121202643

I agree yours was creative, and it did provide some consistent horror. But it could have been written a bit better. If I recall correctly, your dialogue formatting wasn't correct and some of the phrasing was a bit awkward. Apart from that, some moments really stood out to me as particularly unrealistic.

Lastly, it was far too different from the original. That wasn't that big of a deal, but it was something.