Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25326117-20150224231607/@comment-25975226-20150225111433

I agree with Lemon up there. This needs more. It shouldn't be hard to write more lines because this poem is free verse style. Try and add more descriptions or a twist ending. And also, don't, add, more, commas, than, you, need, please. (Yeah, sorry, I just get kind of obsessed over grammar)