Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25389996-20140918210915/@comment-5619531-20140918222927

I'll give the critque on why I deleted it on Spinpasta.

It uses a shitload of cliches. You buy a dvd for a dollar on eBay and couldn't wait to put it in because the character that is featured on the title is your favorite character, the character that you are using is a fucking psychopath that can make anyone roll their eyes, dismemberment porn/pointless violence and blood as a scare tactic, the dreaded "My computer crashed after I watched the episode, then I threw the disc out. If you see this, don't buy it."

Next, the ending is unrealistic. Sure it's a lost episode and it has every chance to be unrealistic, but look at the ending of Squidward's Suicide. It's realistic, but yours is not realistic. Do you think that a cartoon character would just come out and kill you? No. Make the ending realistic.