Talk:The Elder/@comment-25052433-20150726061215

This was very enjoyable. The imagery and such were all on point as well.

Quick review, this story was very creative. You did a good job making it quite easy for the reader to see what it was that you intended. There were quite a few grammar issues, but they weren't so bad that they took away from the enjoyment of the story.

I did feel that it was a bit abrubt in how it ended, and some more detail and explaination would have helped to smooth things out. The characters were developed well enough, but I could have used more to really round Herman out.

Still, this one was a standout. I will give it 70 points, and with Grim's score of 80 we get 150 points.

Final Score 150 points.