Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190406223732/@comment-35711173-20190407195449

Guy, The Packard Clipper does establish the car as being from a few years before the time period you set.

Comments on the story: Unfortunately they aren't glowing.

There is a God or a Devil or monster or something that controls everything and keeps track of the time. It has trapped two people in a time loop. There is no reason given for this giant monster to be there or method for it to be there.

Neither human knows of the time loop while in the events. Neither gives any evidence of being a horrible person "Oh my, so this is my eternal damnation. This is my Hell." It seems like two regular people in the USA, one a not that rich but not that poor immigrant who is kind enough to pick up someone who will bleed all over his seats and give the guy his whiskey and the other the protagonist.

The loop is closed. There is no way for a witness to report the story to the outside. It takes place not on the normal plane of Earth. Neither the immigrant Packard owner nor the protagonist can report anything back.

So I am in the "Huh, what is it" position.

Backing away from those details, I try to look at it as a story that tells something about the human condition but has no surviving witness. I don't find that either.

Loop forever Two guys encounter a really big monster. Endless Loop

What do I learn here?