Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28420405-20161019161951/@comment-28266772-20161025125024

Hey, I can't offer in-depth feedback on errors and things like that but this is a great story. You've addressed the issues I mentioned and the expanded sections really help elevate this story. The descriptive passages are fun and scary, and the overall promise of this story's idea is fulfilled and it reaches it's full potential. You might want to get a second opinion, but as is I think this story will make a great addition to your collection so far.