Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25226524-20161129232736/@comment-25226524-20161201161050

I was really concerned about these issues you raise. Critical analysis of a story as a whole is easily my biggest weakness. I think I likely shouldn't have stated those questions to you the way I did. My intent wasn't really to show that I had done some clever thing in distracting the reader, but rather reminded them of how easily we get caught off guard. This was meant to be almost like a public service announcement about the dangers of driving (I have a horrible fear of vehicles). Even with that, there are still major problems that you have made clear (I'm not defending the work by stating my intent, but rather hoping not to appear like a complete idiot). I think I'll consider adding an end and likely watering down the intentions due to their obvious weaknesses. I really may consider the ending of him going back and being mocked, lol. I'm not sure if the humor fits, but I might be able to work something out. Thanks again.