Talk:Those Things/@comment-33348704-20180202102208

Ambiguity needs a build-up m8. You can't just give us two paragraphs that give no context to a situation. Fearing the unknown is a thing, but that doesn't just happen. You seem to be trying to communicate panic in this story but I think it would have worked a lot better if we had heard the story from the start, e.g. I'm sitting in bed and everything is quiet - I hear a slow creaking - I yell out who's there - silence - massive bang at my door along with banging on the windows - I get under my covers - loud screaming all around - everything goes quiet - after a few minutes I get out of bed - breath on the back of my neck.