Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28060931-20160506143219/@comment-28060931-20160509150634

Electrolord wrote: The basic plot itself is ok.I like the ida of a disease that slowly destroying the planet,and a team of doctors doing verything they can to save it.However,I think that it would benifit your story if you made the writing tone slightly darker.I think that you should to try to piant the scenes darker,if you follow.I`m not saying that you should macrab-ify the entire story,but sprinkling a bit of a darker tone will do the story good.

One of the things that I don`t understand is exactly why the main character feels so guilty when he realizes what his cure has done to the world.He did his best,and he found a cure,how was he supposed to know that society would react the way it did?

I understand that this is a major part of the story,and you can`t just cut it out.But it would be alot better if you would make it clearer exactly why he should have known that this was going to happen.

Other than the mentioned points,I personally think that it`s a pretty good story.The disease concept is somewhat of a cliche,but you do a good job of it.Escpicially the twist.

I hope this review helped.

Thank you! Your review means the world to me, I happy you took your time to read this, despite the questionable lengh. the fact that I am determined to get this on the main wiki, made your review all the more priceless.

I'm glad I did a good job eliminating the cliché part of the disease destroying humanity. I know I'm rambling, but seeing your review really brightened my day, thanks!