Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25558572-20140521050022/@comment-9967354-20140521063629

I can't tell if it will end up clichéd until I read the pasta. I know that you've refrained from giving things away, but the idea sounds a little -just a little- bit more like a comic book adventure than a creepypasta. It's just me jumping to conclusions about the story, though, so I'm most probably wrong.

However, if I may, I'll list the possible and predictable consequences that you should stay away from, if your story should surprise the reader:


 * The teens were friends once, when a giant monster with claws took one away and changed him.


 * They end up having a cat-mouse chase in a dense forest.


 * The perpetrators get hold of one and torture him and stuff.


 * The other escapes, writes this story.


 * The evil teen was bullied by the two others and thus joined the monster to take revenge.

That's not in order, of course, but it's something that would make the story seem predictable. If you've got any of these elements, maybe you should get rid of them.