Talk:Alkalai/@comment-17402125-20131107011608

The stroy was pretty good, and had an interesting twist at the end; but I feel like you could have made the twist a little more obvious and easy for people who don't pay as much attention when reading (I caught it but that's only because I do pay attention to detail). Overall there were minimal mistakes, with the exception of an occasional grammar "derp", but in the end it was an enjoyable and creative story. 8.4/10