Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30996990-20170325023949/@comment-7064562-20170325061948

EmpyrealInvective wrote: Sage Dylans wrote: It's a poem. Like I stated above. Poems still have to accomplish basic things like proper/involving plot, flow/rhythm, capitalization, wording, and simple formatting. Using poetry as a work-around to ignore general issues isn't really a good idea.

I don't mean to be rude, but I don't think you understand how a poem works.



''Telling someone they don't understand how a poem works, while you yourself do not understand how a poem works seems legit to me. ''

A poem isn't a bunch of cliche phrases and lettering that you randomly put togather hopeing it makes since and a deep meaning.

I am a cat

I meow

The dog is a shadow laid upon me while I bask in the sun

Because we drink the milk from the hands of strangers

When there was no cat threats

So I did a dance

And my owner pranced

And thats how I became

there son



<p style="font-style:italic;font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;margin-bottom:0px!important;">^ Random bull that really has on meaning but based on what you think littarly genuis is I'm the next steven king.

<p style="font-style:italic;font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;margin-bottom:0px!important;">Just because it's a poem doesn't mean its a free safe space where anything goes, ignoring things like garmmar and an actual story/goal. A poem has a goal and drive that shadows its works through littarly choices made by the author to help mask the obvious, you on the other hand picked a main topic such as a king/queen, and put works that somehow work with it like blade and poison and blood, not in a good order mind you with a nice flow, but randomly hashed in hopening that it had a deep meaning. Sadly it did not.

<p style="font-style:italic;font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;margin-bottom:0px!important;">The ending blood rain is just so out of place it makes you cringe. It doesn't even ryhme or have a flow, or add into the tale at all.

<p style="font-style:italic;font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;margin-bottom:0px!important;">Another example of this is " May we a play game?" It's a short poem, at least make sure that such simple mistakes arn't in it.

<p style="font-style:italic;font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;margin-bottom:0px!important;">If you're honestly going to ignore feedback by telling someone "They don't know how poems work" as an excuse for your own half assed writing, I suggest you give it a few months off and learn to be mature and accept critisim before coming back to this.