Talk:09/17/10/@comment-26011836-20150310200331

After reading this pasta, here's my thoughts:

Pros: 


 * The buildup in this story is rather well done. I think what makes it great is the fact that it doesn't rely on too many cliches (i.e References to Satan, the use of the term "Hyper Realistic", graphic content that doesn't further the story, etc). Because of this, it helps makes the plot more unpredictable and thus creates suspense that acts as an incentive for the reader to continue reading.


 * With the lack of grammatical and formatting errors (i.e not separating parts of the story into paragraphs), the author does possess some knowledge on how to write a story, which is more than I can say for some other pastas I've read in the past. *Cough* Lost at Disney *cough*


 * Though there were a couple of things in this story that seemed rather unbelievable (i.e the files having slahes in their names when those can't be used in file names, the protaganist's stupidity in certain parts of the story, etc) Most of the time, there seems to be a lot of realism to the story and almost seems like the situation could've happened in real life.

Cons: 


 * While I do like the buildup in this story, the ending really baffled me. Look, I'll give the author some credit for making the protaganist smart enough to call the police over the videos, which could be valuable evidence in the murder case. But for me, I feel like it just a bland COP out. Basically, the ending had little payoff and left so many questions unanswered. I can understand doing this if there was a sequel to this story or if the author wanted to add a bit of mystery to the situation. Even if that was the case however, it's still a ridiculous way to end a story. I had a similar problem with the Goosebumps: Lost Episode pasta. You know, if you're going to put a lot of thought and effort into the buildup, please do the same with the ending. Otherwise, this is what you end up with!

Overall, there were a couple of flaws here and there. However, this seems like a rather decent pasta to read. While reading, I could tell that there was actual thought and effort put into every word I read, so kudos to the author! It's not a pasta I would read over and over but nevertheless I still enjoyed reading it.