Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20170215123526/@comment-25941663-20170310162307

"Common Dwayne" - I don't think it's "common". I think you can use either "com'on" or "c'mon".

"before he could rose up & spurt out" - It's 'rise up and spurt out'. It's better to use the full word instead of the ampersand.

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To be honest, I don't understand what happened. I'm sorry, but I can't really comment on the story.