Talk:Behold Thy Daughter

Very... undercooked? Sorry, I'm new here and not completely up on the whole pasta analogy you guys seem to have going on in the comments threads. This story feels like it's kind of all over the place with no one plot, and it leaves unanswered questions, and a bit of a cliche-feelin ending. It could definitely use some fleshing out and focus. Cthon98 14:38, December 1, 2011 (UTC)