User blog comment:EtherBot/Pissed: A Hallows Eve tale./@comment-24304936-20141028112918

I'm sorry you're completely heartbroken that your short story got deleted, but it really was nonsensical. I get that you strive to have a different writing style etc, but that only works if the reader can be pulled into it as well. This wasn't the case with "War". It was confusing. You began talking about a woman(?) named Ionna (think that was the person's name). Then you proceeded with something they said that, for some reason, repeats itself throughout the story. That's basically it, along with the guy hearing something outside. There was no hook, no time to empathize with the protagonist, and an ending that just fizzed.

Those were the reasons I deleted it. Not everyone can hit a home-run every time they're at bat. You struck out with this one. Don't give up though. Good writers aren't born. Writing is a learning experience.