Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180912183148/@comment-5733573-20180912225011

It's really good apart from a few tiny things. Obviously, remember to proofread. Also, you say the following: "The beast had reared its ugly head but darkness blinded it." Do you mean to say the creature was blind or that Wallace was blinded to it?

Also, the intro takes a really long time to get to any sort of action. Consider weeding out any information you don't need.