Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4849011-20180321014712/@comment-9041013-20180322002541

I get where this is going and what its meant to touch, its nice in that regard, but it's very taste specific. I mean, it's really really really heavy... You need to like this ugh super suspensful, dreadfully slow built that leads to a mild peaking moment. It's not climactic, but it's not anticlimatic, because this does end with a "Oh, fuck, that makes sense" moment.

The explanation of the CPL procedure is useless, we kind of get what it is from the main plot