Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25778851-20141212170625/@comment-24101790-20141212171641

Sorry but there are a lot of issues here: Capitalization (words are capitalized in the middle of sentences, starting dialogue is missing capitalization and "I" needs to be capitalized.

There are also wording errors. " Andrea, I not believe you what your said a while ago i think Big Sister was doing again", "i meet my family and said my Big sis said", "I come him and he said his name .", " I quilted my Scar . My Mother she go to the shed because she heard something . ", "I suprised i run into backyard and she chased me ." If english isn't your first language, I would suggest getting help proof-reading from someone who speaks english. (Or possibly writing in your own language and posting to another wiki.

Punctuation issues. You forget to put periods on a number of sentences. (You need to put a space after using a period.) Commas are missing where needed (Especially before dialogue) and you overuse exclamation points. "I said(comma) "why (Why) do you kicked the mug !(No space needed) " (Wording issues)

Additionally this violates a lot of the blacklisted subjects rule that we have on this site so it can't be posted here. I'm sorry but this needs a lot of work.