Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24821182-20140604134100/@comment-24821182-20140609063006

Booboofinger wrote: Finally managed to sit down and read it all.

I love the philosophical and sarcastic bent you gave the story. I especially like how it all ties together neatly at the end. I did spot some of the comma errors, Julin mentioned, but not throwing stones at that that (you know too well the complicated relationship I have with commas myself).

I also spotted some misconceptions on some of the redefenitions, but I am not sure if that was part of the redefinition or not. First one is a minor one: bears are actually omnivores and not carnivores. Except for Polar Bears most bears actually eat more plants then meat throughout their lifetime.

The second one was a bit bigger. There were no slaves involved in the construction of the pyramids. The workers were in fact conscripted, much in the way soldiers are in many countries today. Then again, not sure if the misconceptions were part of the madness.

Overall I did like the story :) Thanks for the review. The story already has its own article, so I don't know if this thread should stay up or not.

As for the things about the bears and slaves, I wasn't aware of either. While doing a bunch of research for the setting, I had evidently gotten some zoological and historical facts wrong. I'm in two minds about whether or not to correct these issues though, as it's not like the story sticks to reality anyway, but I'll think about it.

Again, thank you.