Talk:Pale Studies/@comment-5679641-20141013165700

Edited it, check the report if you want to see my complaints, this does have a nice chunk of oppertunity if it went into a little bit more detail, I understand that Creepypasta takes advantage of fear of the unknown, but making it too obsecure just leaves a bunch of questions that should be answered in-story, and I think you left it a bit too obsecure. If the Russian Sleep Experiment completely left out the torture the test subjects went through it would seem as if the test subjects were just wrong in the head to begin with or be jerks. In a summery: okay, but has alot of unexplored potential. 6.5~/10