Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20161128051437/@comment-25941663-20161201221949

"and green salt must you encircle the scroll to ward off" - I think there is something missing here. Maybe a 'with' between 'encircle' and 'to ward off'?

"he stuffed the Dark scroll into his satchel" - You forgot to capitalize 'scroll'.

"and he knew it He then looked" - You forgot a period after 'it'.

"dig into the small of his back." - What is 'the small of his back'? I have never heard of it. Bringing it to your attention in case this is a mistake.

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I find it weird how you used 'Squire' and 'Knight' instead of names, but for the wizard and the sorceress you added names in. Is there a reason for that? I believe if there was no named character, it would have been better. Also, the words 'wizard' and 'sorceress' had inconsistent capitalization. Not sure whether that's intentional or not.

With that out of the way, I will say this: I absolutely loved this tale. I know that I'm biased because I adore the mix of horror and fantasy, but this was fantastic. Lord of the Rings, but darker. I especially liked the fact that this read like a legend of old, short, kinda vague, with magic items without much context, anonymous characters and grim fantasy. This had it all, and then more! You even added some suspense, when the light of the Torch blew out till the fight with the dwarf.

Overall, amazing work. This is one of my favourite stories on the wiki. I crave for more now.