Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26027963-20150509215550/@comment-26027963-20150509221115

A. V. Christine wrote: Firstly, a simple little grammar error, you need to change all the yours to you're.

Secondly, the ending felt a little weak to me, maybe you could build a little more suspense or make it a little more chilling by adding some extra information? Also the title kind of ruins the ending because the reader knows what to expect. I fixed everything!