Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25073641-20150227082021/@comment-25975226-20150227100804

There are many grammatical errors in this story, which leads me to assume that English may not be your native language, am I wrong? If it is, then you need to go carefully over this pasta again and add words where they are missing and fix up some of the sentences that don't make sense. (These errors are present throughout the entire story, but you can find examples all in your first paragraph).

Concerning the plot: This has been done many, many times, and I pretty much saw it coming. I was unsure if this meant that he was already dead and that was Hell or something, because the letters on the doors spelled out DEATH IS COMING.

The plot was generic, and too short for there to be any good character development so we could at least feel for the protagonist as he was experiencing these things.

Overall, this needs more work done on it. Strangely enough, I didn't pick up any spelling errors, just missing words and confusing sentences. I think if you edit out the mistakes and re-post it, you could get more advice on how to fix the plot.