Talk:Gray Steam/@comment-10789912-20160923182641

I am happy with this submission.

You were given two rather difficult cliches to pull off without ripping something else off, but you did it. The plot was decent, but the end was a nice, subtle poke to the stomach.

The writing itself was great, except for errors (no spelling errors, just some missing words and punctuation failures) that are found throughout the story. These could have been buffered out with another read through the tale.

The description of the smiling men fit the dream-esque world around them, which was nice.

There really isn't much I can say for this story, except that I'm happy it was submitted.

8/10