Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25035532-20140628192430/@comment-24352864-20140702171526

It feels more like a Character Skeleton for an OC instead of an actual story. The first part was basically the aftermath or something but, like the earlier reviewers said, the second part could be developed into a story.

However, with this kind of thing, I can kind of see the direction it's going to go. Dark creatures take a liking to a very depressed and outcasted character and soon took her in. Eventually, she became one of them and suddenly had the power over all shadows. With that, she finally has the power to rule over all creation. Uh..okay.

To be honest, the premise is no longer that scary. The character is so overpowered that you can immediately tell that no one can survive her wrath. Supernatural powers can either make or break a story. Since you've already established her superiority, there is no longer that feeling and influx of emotions present when she makes a kill since, no one is able to fight back anyway. As for the backstory, this revenge against society motive is getting old.