Talk:Dead Bart/@comment-3541151-20141129195021

My old review, I did it from memory, now I want to do it from re-reading. Yeah, it does seem like a cheap way to tell a relatable story like the simpsons, but you did capture something unique from the simpsons. That sometimes the episodes had drama, and the way they ended acts would leave an impression when that shot captured something simple/powerful, for instance the concept especially in one shot. The idea of containing the simpsons early exploits with the unknown is unique, and I give this pasta more credit than originally. However there were parts that were unneeded, and too close to Suicide Mickey, and thereby ruining the originality that was so well concieved reading this again. I want to give you credit, where credit is do for the story overall, but the creepypasta ws fine without the distortion and badly drawn cliche. And the crying for the duration of act 2 seemed a bit uncreative, I like that you were going for a touch of drama, but what is not well for a big piece, is not well for a whole pie. I'll end my review saying, albeit morbid, the way you did the supernatural elements of the story was interesting. Almost distracts from the badly written second act. I don't like you as a Simpsons writer, or necessarily a Lost Episode writer, but I think you have some creative ideas and should keep writing. 6/10