Talk:A Glass of Water/@comment-25451854-20140922195030

I get the banterful style but there are some elements that just seem arrogant - it's like you don't even care to be writing the story. I don't care what kind of phone the guy has, or the fact he was naked, or the fact that he pulled out his cock and "wissed". Also, there are extraneous details such as 'long katana'. It's a katana. We know what a katana is, and it's purpose, and why it could be considered long.

The punchline horror was entertaining, however. I really enjoyed the fact that it reminds me of those little, nagging fears we have in around the house. The story was of the same ilk as the fear some of us get when we shower, in those few moments as we rinse our hair, our eyes close, and we wonder what could be watching us...

7/10