User blog comment:Underscorre/Jeff the Killer Rewrite Contest!/@comment-25052433-20151015061018/@comment-5973399-20151016003259

While editing down a 40,000 word piece to 10,000 is impressive, it doesn't change the fact Dr Bleed and Levi both managed to portray the bullies as actual characters as opposed to cartoon villains. Sorry, but they've shown it's possible and therefore can be done. Hell, Levi's didn't even use up half the word count. It's not as if the story spends its time on something as important as developing the antagonists.

The parts about the town rejecting Jeff and the parents being petty and abusive is already very obvious in the text. It just felt like these bits should have gone in the edit because they killed the pace and weren't very interesting either. "A policeman visits for a bit and then goes" and "kid goes to his aunt's" aren't exactly oscar-winng storylines.

My main fundemental problem with this is that it's just the orginal with better prose and a few of the locations and exact details being changed.