Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-40151278-20190715115832/@comment-36627132-20190715122311

Spelling wise, the story currently suffers from poor grammar, missing capitalizations, misspelled words, poor wording, and tense shifts. The very first word is missing its first letter.

As for the story, it is pretty bland and it leaves the question as to where in the world this kid lives which tortures random people just because?

And on top of that it turns out to be another killer-origins story.