Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35333294-20190219050935

I dunno, I just want some feedback on this SPOOP rough draft plot I conceived outta my foul, decayed mind for awhile, but didn't have the balls to post it 'till now:

An explorer and artifact finder named Samuel has stumbled upon an odd map he found deep in a Mayan temple, which describes a mysterious floating island located smack dab in the middle of what is currenlty known the "Bermuda Triangle". He then decides to show his findings via the internoodles, posting updates as to any new information about this odd map. Unfortunately, no one believes him. Fortunately, he finds the floating island covered in a thicc fog during a helicopter exploration that that his conveniently rich friend, Terance, owns. Unfortunately, the helicopter gets rekt due to Bermuda Triangle logic, and they both crash on the island. With no way out, the duo traverse the new, misshapen landscape in search of some answers. They must be alert, however, as there's a dangerous being who's on the prowl for any forign visitors!

The story will be told in a limited 3rd person view, because 1st person is, like, soo outdated!

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I felt like I just tried to submit a shitty saturday morning TV show rather than a SPOOP story, I mean, it doesn't even sound scary, but eh. Still shit no matter what.

Like the concept? Hate it? (I do!)

Any form of criticism will be welcome, especially ones that are both harsh AND neatly constructed!

I like to hate myself!

(No suicide, tho) 