Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28266772-20160729155428/@comment-28266772-20160802142646

I really appreciate your feedback guys! It's so hard to pick out errors by yourself, I find it like looking at one of those visual illusions where you just can't see anything until someone else shows you and then it's all you can see. The notes you've given me are extremely helpful and I'll integrate them over time. I'm interested to hear what you both think of the Fatso segment but I imagine, what with the collab coming up, I'll probably put this story on the back burner until I can really have at the Fatso (that's what she said) and bring it up to the same quality level as The Witch. Again, this will heavily depend upon your input on the fatso section since if you both rate it very highly I may just fix the basic errors and put it up.

As for now though my gut instinct is that it does not reflect the creativity of the first segment and that I may want to go away and think of some incredibly horrible things for poor Annabelle to inflict upon Ian.