Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20181206070508/@comment-35711173-20181206221218

The story is good stuff. You have the plot and the story. This is one of the stronger first drafts I have seen in the Workshop.

You do have first draft typos in grammar, spelling and punctuation. I am going to put the Grammarly report for your reference. This won't take long to clean this up. The issues are the typical minor stuff - It's instead of Its, missing commas, extra commas, etc.