Talk:Leaves/@comment-26444017-20180710055129

The story was okay, but I guess I just didn't get a spook from it. For me, there's too much information missing. Like the person in the water. The story makes it sound like a corpse, but because of the wording, I instead pictured a person standing in the water, looking up at Kelly in the tree. This person isn't identified, so I'm missing that connection. Then the sheriff gets a call, presumably to Kelly's house, but there's nothing after that. I understand that plucking the leaves off and dropping them into the river is what's causing it, but I don't think the sheriff would find Kelly's corpse any more noteworthy than the others, so I don't understand why it sounded like a more important discovery than the others.

So, overall, I was more trying to figure out how this was meant to work than actually getting spooked. Oh, and super minor, but there's a spelling error in paragraph 6. 'Leave' instead of 'leaf'.