Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20180217215030/@comment-32764586-20180218120327

BloodySpghetti wrote: Good work, over all.

A lot of psychology involved, I kept feeling Jung, Freud and a LOT of Peterson from you there. Look them up, might help you with further developing the characters and solving the conflict at stake here.

You do contradict yourself in the sense that the AI doesn't feel yet still feel, in a very humanlike sense. He doesn't feel whatever you find "burdening" to feel, I guess but feels pleasure... a lot of it, he is basically sadistic, which is not supposed to be possible for a being without a biological, fully neurologically wired body. so I suggest you add some word or something to highlight how it's the idea of "feeling good" that is there, rather than the sensations themselves. Ah, I get it. Yea, I prob should do that

Any other suggestions? I hope this stacks up well to the original for you.