Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181008055258/@comment-9041013-20181008171410

It's really weird, in a good way and still has some absurtidity to it, I wouldn't say it's bad, it's just weird to the bone. It's a very good kind of weird, and it's smooth so, that's also good. Reminds me of S.Y Agnon's "A Simple Story", a novel that chronicles the life of a man named Hershel who has to zig-zag between the expectations of his bourgeois Jewish communities standarts and his own personal interests, a process that leads him to a possibly untreated insanity (he gets treatment, but seems like not everything is fine at the end). I hated this novel because it told a very absurd story, however, looking at it from a proper perspective it makes sense as it speaks about a small community in the late 19th century Eastern Europe.

Take it as a major compliment, Agnon recieved the Nobel's prize for Literature and it's still, some odd eighty years later one of his most recognized and researched works.

I like where this is going, if you still hadn't planned how to go forward, maybe you can look up Ed Kemper's bio and see how you can fit his "insanity" with what Ben will have to do, properly written a "burst of murderous rage" could work well here inspite of it being a somewhat hated trope around the community.

Also, you've some awkward wording and tenses in the beginning... BE PATIENT MAN, BE PATIENT.