Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26535147-20150715233120/@comment-26715482-20150718144838

Aside from the multiple spelling errors the plot is very basic,also you're asking about parts that sound cheesy well I can name a few easily; The writer going through a shady part of town, the doll was researched so easily by a friend who's only in one or two lines, the doll being made by a depressed guy who died, the creators sending it to some orphans house just to die for no explained reasons, and finally the doll haunting the teen for no rhyme or reason.

In short your story is very simple and cliched in my eyes because it follows a lot of other haunted object stories also you don't explain why the doll even haunts and kills people.