Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26193563-20150504003221/@comment-25763427-20150512183714

RisingFusion wrote: I posted a new version of this, and I'd like someone to check it out. "What made curl up into a paralyzed ball of fear" It should be "What made me curl up into a paralyzed ball of fear" instead. Other than that, everything is okay.

I'm not sure which version I like better, but I think this is a step in the right direction. Maybe lengthen it a little bit, I'm not sure how, but it still seems a little too short.