Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190309004843/@comment-9041013-20190309185442

I can't buy into the main premise of this, rape a girl to get her pregnant, but how could he know when was the right time? Or he raped her for the sake of rape and then went all father mode when he realized she had gone pregnant? This whole story is just weird, and not in the good sense.

You like a person try to enter a relationship with them, and the rest will come, if you get into that relationship and maintain it. I don't really see the type of creepy-sticky person who'd commit crimes being able to raise a child or even wanting to.

A bunch of crucial things also happen because they have to otherwise the plot has holes, like Annie randomly dying. Nobody seeing or hearing whatever happens during the childbirth, nobody noticing a gun shot. All these things don't feel natural and thus aren't a good way to go.

I do suggest, for future stories, that you'd use the "kidnapping a kid because I can't have one" twist, it'd work better if done properly.