Talk:Exhausted/@comment-Jay ten-20160814130755/@comment-Jay ten-20160815150216

Don't get me wrong, it's not a bad ending; it just feels sudden and possibly not drawn out enough for the situation. I'm not really certain how to rectify it or if it's even anything that needs it. You handled the scene well enough, but I suppose I would've liked to see the story continued for a bit. In a way, that's kind of a good sign in regards to the rest of the story. I also felt like the "Life is good" line was a bit too much foreshadowing, so I maybe would've liked a couple more entries to make me question my assumption and reestablish the ominous situation. I don't know, man, my head feels like it's in a vice - take my ad"vice" with caution.

And yes, my mind alone is more than enough for me to deal with. Thanks for the well wishes.