Talk:Containment Project 2 II - Alexis/@comment-35711173-20181129171437/@comment-35711173-20181129184132

Thedarkflintstone,

Note the word "optains" in the last sentence in your message above. That sentence is also a run-on that's too big to keep in your brain and there's unnecessary passive voice. Consider the following rewrite:

"The main character lives in a dome that consists of a fake 1920s town. The story says that she obtains the laptop from a room located in the underground tunnel system which has modern equipment in it."

This may seem picky, but we know nothing about you or what you mean than the words we read on screen. If you don't correctly use language that makes your story easy to read and interesting, we won't read it. It doesn't matter how cool your plot is. We give up and go to a different story.

What do you compose in? Do you compose off line or type the stories directly into the web site? What tools do you use to proof your work?

Please, please post your drafts in the Writer's Workshop in the forum. Critiques there make my stories ten times better than the first draft that I thought was wonderful.