Talk:Drop/@comment-25941663-20150407093524

I don't claim to be an expert on micro pastas, but from my experience I have found that (in micropastas) every single word counts. Every word should have immediate impact over the reader and should convey a meaning without missing a heartbeat. And simpler words are (in most cases) much more powerful than sophisticated ones.

Also, micropastas' power lies in the "show don't tell" trick. Don't describe what is happening, imply that something is happening. Of course, everything needs a little description, but in micropastas it should be minimal.

In your pasta, the greatest point is the ending which leaves things open. But by then it is too late.

In this pasta, you used at least three sophisticated words and did a lot of descriptive work. So, before writing a micropasta, you should decide what you want to get from it. Do you want it to be creepy, or do you want it to win a beauty pageant?

Having said that, I have to admit this wasn't that bad. But it could have been so much creepier if it wasn't for the sophistication.