Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180506113215/@comment-9041013-20180506225332

I are no see scares, I are sad, I are cry.

You've a lot of science fails here, mate, like a terrible whole lot. Hypothetically speaking, going forward in time is probably the easiest thing to do, just go at Lightspeed or faster and boom you're in the future. Going back, we don't even know if it's possible on a physical level (some Chinese was recently published, but it's suspected to be a bucket load of bull.)

Secondly, giving a person the ability to telepathically converse with animals is a condemnation to a mental hospital for said person, on a mental level animals are likely to be a todlers who could utter very few words, never grow up and mostly just scream at you. Also, their thought process is far "simpler" than ours, hence we'd find them stupid. There was an experiment to determine how would Chimps sound if they could speak, and physiologically they can (virtually same vocal cord structure as us), but their brains aren't developed in the speech department and they would sound literally like demons.

Honestly, I've no clue how Telepathy is even supposed to work, it's just very sci-fi.

Here's the thing, you've a great basis for a good monster, an amazing monster. You know the Hecatoncaries of Greek mythology? Well originally they were the children of Uranus and Gaia, but they were born ugly and uncontrollable (with fifty heads and a hundred hands - hence the name) so Uranus had locked them up in Tartaros, due to his disgust with them, then came Zeus, had them practice the use of their overly convoluted physiology and boom - they became the horrifying giants that threw freaking mountains at the Titans. You have a mental sort of Hecatoncares here, it's a legion of minds compressed together into a single being, it couldn't sustain itself at first but then it became Doctor X on steroids... Do you even know how powerful Doctor X is? He can kill you with his thoughts. Imagine any kind of possible mind related ability to mind transported energy and multiply by thousands, perhaps millions, add anger and you have a thing that can wipe out civiliztions by burning out their brains in moments, it could control massive amounts of people, trick them, implant and extract information... It's a monster unlike any other.

Yours needs a lot of "bad oomph" though, and to do something truly sinister.

As it is, your story now has just a base and not much more... but it could be the next It ;)