Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33488654-20180822020522/@comment-33488654-20180823010027

BloodySpghetti wrote: Steven&quot;SpringBubba&quot;Savoy wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote:

Steven&quot;SpringBubba&quot;Savoy wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: So basically, this makes very little sense.

If a demon has a preference for Canine hosts, why choose a Labrador Pup? Pups are tiny... unless you mean an adolescent dog that reached it's full size but then again, Labradors are awful as evil doers. They are super friendly and sociable, hell, they are actually dependent on having someone to socialize with. Also, A Lab's friendly psyche seems to be a dominant trait as apparently all cases of mutts that have a Labrador parents end up inhereting the Labrador's friendliness.

All of this seems way too cartoonish and silly to me, quite honestly.

I just couldn't connect to this story, it lacks the creep fact.

Have it be about a more intimate encounter and how the zombie dog stalks a person and tries to kill them, hell, even just a stray "wild" dog... or rather a pack of them would be scarier if done right. The zombie dog needs to be looking like an actual rotting dog carcass, that's a nasty one, describe how it's moving oddly, producing weird sounds, smelling like death itself (and it's a VERY bad smell) etc. And I know that Labradors are sweet, that is why the demon chose to possess Cooper, it knew that no one would suspect a sweet, innocent lab like him to be a cold blooded killer. Because no one would suspect a zombified dog as dangerous... Alright... No, i know people would indeed suspect a zombified dog as being dangerous.

I was just responding to your reply about labradors being awful as evil doers. So, the demon is a stupid one... because it forgot that mortal carrions tend to rot when they die. I thank you sir for your critisms, I was just using parts of the wizard's rewrite to elaborate Cooper's past, along with elaborationg on the effects light has on the demon dog's form.