Talk:In the Circle/@comment-25052433-20140805212737

Simply amazing. Excellent timing, original plot and a spine chilling twist.

What you did right:

Just about everything. Honestly, I am hard pressed to find anything to critique here.

What could have improved my experience with this:

-I wasn't particularly impressed with the sudden paralysis concept. It seems like you were stirring in a supernatural concept that was never resolved. I suppose if the director can make people live forever, he can also make people paralyzed, but still, for me, I found that part of the story to be the only lacking aspect, in my opinion.

-The immunity to death. I could have been on board with the idea of them becoming immune to disease or common illness. However, being able to survive a bullet through the head, that makes this guy more of an eternal than an immortal. Also, that whole piece seemed to contradict itself a bit. He gets constant promotions at work, wins money by accident and seemingly can't fail at anything. So why would this character want to kill himself?

Other than those two critiques, this was a work of art, and I am still proud to give it a 10/10. The flaws I noted were flaws in my personal opinion, but do not deteriorate the over all experience of a damned fine pasta.