User blog comment:CrazyWords/My First True Review: Nightingale, by HumboltLycanthrope/@comment-26054278-20150531011837

I have two major problems with this review.

1. Grammar errors. There were multiple errors in the review that could have easily been fixed by a quick proofread. Here are two examples:

The part where he describe the Virgin Mary?

The question mark doesn't really make sense, and "describe" should have an "s" at the end.

''All in All, 78/100. I would a higher score is there wasn't so many questions.''

The word "is" should be "if".

There are a few more minor ones as well that I suggest you simply look through and review.

2. You only talk about what the author didn't do right. I know this sounds odd, as reviews are for criticism, but in a review, you also have to mention the things the author did particularly well. Throughout this review, there was only 1 line that I felt you actually mentioned some sort of praise for the story.

I haven't read the story, but when you eventually give the story 78/100, there should be sentences in the review that describe what you think the author did best or very good so the author is able to know what he should continue doing/expand upon on in further stories.

With those aside, you did do some things right. You did accurately say your problems with the pasta and explain why you had these problems. Even though I'm not sure about your rating system (as I find it hard to believe how somebody can grade a story out of 100), you did include one to summarize your overall feelings towards the pasta. Therefore, that part was good.

In final words, it was done okay, but needs some extra work and proofreading first.