Talk:Anti-Sonic.dll/@comment-31179891-20170626113021

this is just awful

references to a borderline trollpasta that somehow gained traction

no buildup except for the monologue of a poorly written protagonist

use of audio transcriptions which are terrible plot devices in creepypastas and also do not contribute to any tension

massive wall of text that has no breaks other than the start of a new paragraph and instantly disengages the reader, muh "deep shit about the human nature" that has no real purpose or good placement in the story and just the overall premise of guys doing gun stuff trying to fight evil monsters like its the plot of creepypasta aliens or something, ruins it for me

also, there is a lack of research within the first paragraph. the character(s) is described as having an "XM8 Assault rifle on his back.". the xm8 assault rifle was a prototype never made for mass production for civilians and the only known models are in the hands of the army/government and H&K themselves. this breaks any suspension of disbelief assuming that the protagonist is a civilian.

2.5/10