Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26475800-20151210060738/@comment-25037895-20151211000508

Here's what I noticed (CTRL+F to find automatically):

"but that turn(ed) out to be nothing more..."

"than a month before being replace(d) by someone."

"Jeff started to rattle off different thought(s) as the(y) popped into Dave’s head."

" “Okay, I believe you now.(a comma to replace the period)” Both (both) men said in unison. "

"no one wants to know about their parent(')s sex life,"

"Dave asked moving closer to Jeff."

"will fulfill our need to have mystery in our lives again.(a comma to replace the period)” Jeff said, his face becoming longer as he lamented."

"and I am glad you decided that (to) play the game by its rules."

“I choose dare.(a comma to replace the period)” Dave blurts out.

"he place(d) his pinky into the stapler on his desk."

"The cold metal kissed both side(s) of his little finger..."

so I am offering you a five minute brake break,"

"Every finger closed around the handled (handle)"

" Dave’s (Dave) lowered his head,"

"and it became so confusing as to if (though) it was..."

"pulling his upper lip away from this (his) sharpened teeth."

"but something about the way the (that) Dave held himself"

"and don’t move them until I tell you too (to)"

"Jeff slammed a letter opener through on (one) and pinned it to the table"

"Before the game had even started he cast a spell over the building, than (then) one"

“Game(')s over.”

" “ Your (You're) right, I’m not quitting. I’ve won.” "

"and with that he wish(ed) that all the torments of Hell would be amplified for him,"

"He now knows that that day they when (went) hunting"