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here once was a kid named Ian Summers......He was a nice kid of 14 years old.He has long black hair, hazel eyes, a gray shirt with his “I” on it, A blue belt that could hold stuff and a spotted hat. Ian had everything he wanted, a video game system, a few toys, and more. His parents were divorced. Ian had autism and ADHD which made him having to take medicine. Without it he would be hyper like anyone with what he has. One day Ian ran out of medicine. Ian couldn't focus. then His Mother came in and told Ian that the bus will be there soon. Ian Replied,"Alright Mom." He walked outside with his bag and got ready to go. Then the bus came and picked Ian up. He was thinking when someone punched him hard. It happened to be James,a bully that had picked on Ian before. James said, ”Oh hey wimp.” Ian replied with a sorta depressed look, ”Hey, James.” “You know Ian,” said James,”Your my best victim to pick on” "Whys that?" "Cause...Your weak. “Shut UP!” Replied Ian throwing a punched. James dodged it and grabbed Ian by the shirt and yelled out.“If you ever try that again I will pound your face in with a brass knuckle!” He then through Ian into his spot. At School, Ian did his usual morning routine, go to his locker, go to class, talk to the pretty girl that was his friend. After Ian had talked to the pretty girl. James walked up to him and screamed at Ian. “If you talk to my girlfriend ever again I will kill you!” "How about I just not listen to you" James was mad and punched him in the gut. Then a teacher walked up to James and told him to go to the principles' office. "Are you alright?" The Teacher asked. Ian was feeling fine. He didnt need help. Ian ran off to his other classes after he got up. His school day went by like normal after that, talking to friends, getting a passing grade. he walked home because it was a nice day. Ian decided he walked through the woods as a shortcut. He thought he saw a man in the distance but thought “No thats impossible.” He walked on when he heard someone behind him. It was someone he had not seen before. a man towering over him. He had no face. A few tentacles came out of his back. Ian's vision was sorta becoming blurry. Ian was terrified of this man and he had backed up and ran. He was a fast runner from being in track. He ran and ran until he got out. Ian kept running and then he ran into the street where Ian soon got hit by a car. He was immediately taken to the hospital. While Ian was knocked out. he had a nightmare. He was in the forest walking around. He then ran into the man he had seen before. It was a tall man with no face, completely white, had some sorta suit on, and he was surrounded by children. The Man pointed at Ian and the kids charged at him. Ian was scared and ran for it. He ran on in the woods and began seeing the man again and again and again. His mind was playing tricks on him right? Ian ran everytime he saw this man. He expected to get outta there by now, expecting not to see the man. But, no, he kept running into the man over and over. Then Ian tripped and landed face first ,on to the ground, towards the man.Ian Looked up and asked him, "What do you want from me!?" The man had wrapped a tentacle around Ian and lifted him up. Ian was scared and was crying. Then the man put the other tentacle around Ian. Ian started to realize something, this is a dream. After all Ian was being picked up by tentacles from a man. That is physically impossible and he knew that. So Ian decided he wake up from his nightmare.Ian closed his eyes and said, "3....2.....1." He woke up in the hospital with a scared look on his face. His mom walked into the room 5 minutes later. She was relieved to see Ian alive. So relieved infact she ran up and hugged him. “Ian I heard what happened...You ran and got hit by a car.” she said.”Ian look...you’re the only child I have left. I dont want to lose you! you have to be more careful.” Then the doctor walked in with a check board. “You’re lucky Ian. You could have broken your legs but you didn't. You will be ready to leave in soon 2 hours.” Ian was questioning his sanity. He was sane. he knew it without a doubt. He saw the man outside the window, stalking Him.Ian was forced to watch him because he was in a hospital bed. He still was was assuming he was sane. he thought that his mind was just playing tricks on him! I mean Ian of all people would be the least less likely to become insane as he watched this man...But he saw him earlier. He saw him in his dreams! This had to be his imagination! Ian was sane... right? Two Hours went by and it was becoming 9:00 pm. His mother drove him home and Ian immediately went to his room. His mother on the other hand went to the to the bedroom and continue writing a report to the school. Ian was in his room, his lights off and nothing on. Ian was laying on the bed and began questioning his sanity. he started to hear voices in his head. one said kill your mother. Ian said no to it...the voice became louder and louder. Ian said no again. He kept saying no until he was expecting for it to stop. He saw the Man, once again,stalking him from outside the window. then Ian got up and the voice in his head became quieter as Ian walked to the kitchen and grabbed 2 knives with both hands. Ian was sorta laughing when he started to walk to her room. His mother was writing and not noticing her son about to walk up and kill her. Ian raised his hand with the 1st knife in it. then Stabbed his mother into the shoulder and took it out. His Mother screamed and turned around to see Ian with a insane like smile. “Ian. What are you doing! Why did you do that!” She screamed. Ian took the other knife and began stabbing her in her heart until the screaming stopped….Ian was far too gone.He laughed a he watched the blood dripped from the knife until he felt he needed to do something about the evidence. He ran to the shed and grabbed a box of fireworks and ran back into the house.He took out his knives and put them into his belt pockets. the handles still stuck out but he didn't mind. He grabbed his mother’s lighter and then lit the fire works in the house. He ran out and watched as the fireworks went off in there lighting up the house. He looked at the neighbor's home and saw a man watching in shock as he saw the house burn and the man grabbed the phone. Ian saw this and ran. He ran onto the street and the cops started to come after him. He had a match and one more firework box; nothing else. But he decided it would be a good idea to light up the trees. Perhaps if he that he thought ,with his twisted mind, If he lit up a fire work, it could be use as a distraction. He ran into the woods and hid behind a tree and took out the match and lit it up. The fireworks spilled out of the box everywhere and hit the trees.The Fire began spreading everywhere. He ran as the fire spreaded behind him. Then Ian saw the man and ran up to him...the man looked at Ian and then took out a marker and marked him with a symbol. The man began to walk as the fire spread. Ian followed him with a insane smile. "So where are we going?" Is the last thing ever heard from Ian Summers. A few weeks a girl named Nadia and her friend, Katie, were watching television when a news report came on. The news reporter began,” a young kid named James from the Delo district has recently been found in the woods...he had been stabbed multiple times and had a “I” carved into his head. The investigators think the prime suspect is the dead man named, Ian R. Summers because his body was never found in the fire a few weeks ago.

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