Talk:Ad Nauseam, Ad Mortem, Ad Infinitum/@comment-25170312-20150613002953

Finally decided to tackle this one. The story was very vivid and well thought out. Though, I was surprised at the great number of redundancies in word choice. You might want to take a second look. Here are a few examples:

''He was part of my family and he was gone. I didn't like him, but I did love him because he was a part of my family.''

''I wasn't prepared for what I would see and I don’t think I ever would be. I stood outside the guest room for a few moments, trying to prepare myself for what I would see next.''

At first I thought it was me shifting in bed / waiting for the sound of my bed shifting / the sound of the door shifting in its frame / The bed creaked as she shifted into a sitting position / and it shifted slightly with her passing through it / She shifted through the door

^ You used shifting/shifted so many time it became really noticeable. Also, the last time you use it, the meaning changes to mean phasing, so that was confusing. I suggest at least changing that last one to phased instead of shifted.

Honestly, I really think you should go over it with a fine tuned comb. You will really find a lot of stuff that needs ironing out. I kept getting taken out of the story because it didn't flow properly. Everything else is great, though: characters, dialogue, plot, etc.