Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37230542-20181018161859/@comment-36393004-20181018165705

Very nice first story for here. There are a couple minor mistakes but a quick run through Grammarly should brush that up. Personal opinion here (and some of the other author's might disagree), but at the end this sentence seems a little awkward to me.

"Kelly isn't here anymore, so nothing is standing in the way between you and I."

Maybe: "Kelly isn't here anymore, so nothing is standing between you and I."

Or: "Kelly isn't here anymore, so nothing is in the way us."

Both together read clunky to me, but again that's my opinion.

At any rate, welcome to the Wiki!