Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181005210030/@comment-36393004-20181005213413

Ok man, you have managed to tug at my heart strings with this one and that means I care about Ben. Great job with that and I see what you meant about the details. I don't know where you are going with this but I know just where youare coming from.(So glad I read the Wyrm series before this.) I saw once instance where "Ben" wasn't capitalized but other than that, I think you're strait. I am kind of wondering if the beating at the end was too severe, you don't wanna kill the kid. I mean he is just 11, even though I think I understand the story you are trying to craft.