Talk:Caffeine/@comment-26030957-20151228155158

This was a fun pasta: a short and sweet classic.

I always admire anyone bold enough to write in second person and you did a good job with it. The last line is hysterical, though I'd personally lose the (s), there was nothing written earlier to suggest more than one protagonist (unless I missed something, did I?).

There were some verb tense changes that struck me as odd, though, switching from present to past: "when you got back"--past, "as you pull"--present; "you knew"--past, "you wash"--present; "you begin"--present, "you thought"--past.

I would like to know a bit more about this character, what would he have said at the conference to defend himself? what drove his roommates to dump a bucket of oozing fluid over him. Even something small like, "So what if I hadn't done the dishes in weeks and ate all their food."