Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-26886981-20160526172912/@comment-28266772-20160531125850

A very good story that was well written and enjoyable to read. The end reveal was very atmospheric, but it also wasn't immediately clear. Perhaps the old man could have said something that clarified his malintent towards the young girl. Something like, "it's finally quiet again", or perhaps he could have walked past in a hurry the first time he didn't say anything. I don't know. These are just suggestions.

Either way, a very good story. I enjoyed it a lot.