Talk:Exhausted/@comment-PixCity-20161009030849

I love the originality of the plot, and may I say that the way you expressed the man's feelings in the story really showed that it was in a diary was exceptionally well. It really made me feel that I really was reading the diary of the man. I also loved the scare factor of the car, and the part where he saw the car in the fog really sent chills up my spine. The wording was also fine, and I loved how smooth the pace was going.

With that said, I only saw a few flaws. Two, to be exact. One was just a minor spelling error. The second, however, was that the man seemed to remember everything perfectly on his twins' grand finals even though more than a week has passed. I dislike how unreal it seemed that he would just remember it all like it was the back of his hand.

However, I still loved it, and I give it a solid 7.75/10.