Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150505190955/@comment-26326346-20150506000607

I made all of the changes you suggested I was a bit sleepy when I typed it up, so I accidentally skipped a few words. I am glad you caught them, I am kind of embarrassed about it. I was originally going to have it be two cops respond, but I figured that since the town has a low population and that three children were missing, the Police Department might send out a bit of a more aggressive response (be desperate).

Sometimes SWAT teams require lots of planning and normally they wouldn't be used in a situation such as the one I have in the story. They can respond and breach instantly when they feel the need to do so. I'd say that there was a bit of a time gap since Isaac went in the hole, but I'm not quite sure how long of one myself, probably 20-30 minutes.

I'm considering changing it from a SWAT team to two police officers.

Can you give me an example of the simple phrasing? I'm a bit unsure of what you mean exactly. Thank you for the feedback and suggestions! I appreciate them :)