Talk:Jeff the Killer 2015/@comment-27358820-20151207043810

As expected, one of the most horribly written CPs in the history of the art has been rewritten just as poorly. For starters, this is an absolute grammatical catastrophe from start to finish. The standard comma is either underused, far overused, or just used wrong in almost every other sentence. The writer is very clearly American, yet utilizes the spelling of "gray" as "grey", which is easily the most trivial of middle school writing errors that takes place here. I have never wanted to "red pen" anyone's piece as badly as this particular one, but I simply do not have that kind of time to devote.

Next up are shockingly poor efforts at descriptive writing. Someone must have told this particular "writer" that more letters mean a better piece, which could not be any further from the truth. This is an attempt at the "Tom Clancy" style of description (which by itself walks the fine line between absolutely boring and riveting), but winds up becoming a 5th grade research paper feebly attempting to reach a thousand word minimum. (ie; the cat was very very very very very soft, and very very very very fluffy)

The whole story was a terrible bore. If you could even work your way through the awful attempts at description, and the unnecessary, as well as unrealistic, narration of every single thought that could possibly go through a character's mind, you surely remained disappointed. I personally only bothered to read as much as I did to get to the ending, the only part of this age old CP that's even worth reading. But then you just remain disappointed. None of the right things are described in detail, the killings are boring and end far too abruptly, making the entire effort a waste of time, for both the reader and the writer. I could very well go on for even longer than this elementary writing effort just picking it to pieces, but I'd really like to just move on with my life, forget this ever happened, and find something worth reading. I surely hope the writer finishes highschool, or even takes any type of English course at his local community college. Until then, I hope and pray that I never stumble upon another work by this author.

Tl;Dr: This was an awful and an immense waste of my time. When you feel as though something has wasted your time while reading CP, that's really saying something.