User blog comment:Nirvana4Life/Story?/@comment-4750363-20141219014411

Yeah, um, I'm afraid so. Deletion due to several storytelling problems.

Mainly that it's pretty generic. The only thing one can see is that this is a killer creeping onto a victim, which has done several times before. I'm not saying everything has to be original ideas. That's perfectly fine as long as one makes an effort to make the story be remarkable among the rest, which I'm afraid this story didn't do.

Also 'look behind you'. Damn that is one of the worst things one can add to a story. It completely kills any suspension of disbelief.