Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181002083401/@comment-9041013-20181003103859

Again, don't have anything big to complain about here. It's pretty solid; aside from a few minor things. Like, the italic font for "Book of Agony" is a like you're marking out for yourself, Don't tell me it's the theme of the story, I already know that from the direct title of the book.

Also, why did his father start going all murderous over his kid cursing at him? "I'll beat your ass up" is fine enough. Why do all fathers want to curb stomp their kids into oblivion in these stories.

On a very positive note, I felt a chill when it came to the prank part, nice description there.

Good chapter overall.