Creepypasta Wiki:Deletion Appeal

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Clown Doll
I Don't know how this dosent meet quality standards, I have no spelling errors and made sure my story isn't stupid anyway

also my auto correct likes to screw up things a lot

But please post my story despite my errors i don't care if people bully me or anything please

Sincerley, Mr.HattyHattington


 * Your story wasn't up to quality standards, please click that link and read it over as the errors in your story were numerous and quite large.


 * Spelling/wording issues: "I saw looked aboanded" (abandoned), "I sunndenly (suddenly) wake up in my bed," Additionally the story is told in past tense, make sure your tenses reflect this. "I got too freaked out to dilly (-) dally any further. I ran like fast, and faster,and faster...." The protagonist is writing this, so they should avoid writing as if this is a narrative. "an english man toy maker" man is not needed as it is implied in toymaker. It's=it is, its=possession. "Son, its (it's) not", "its (it's) just some lump", etc.


 * Spacing issues: after using commas, periods, conclusive punctuation; you need to space it. "there,they", " joy,unfortunately,he", "glitch,it", etc. Capitalization issues, the start of dialogue and thoughts should be capitalized. "it was just a dream", ""don't replace me...", etc.


 * Punctuation issues: "the thing that struck me most was a sad looking,clown(comma not needed) doll." Commas missing before dialogue: " saying "don't (Don't) replace me...please..."."


 * Story issues: The story has been told quite a few times before and the issues above really make the story seem rushed and not checked out. I'm sorry, but the story is fairly generic and there are far too many errors for it to pass our quality standards. I'm turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:07, June 26, 2015 (UTC)

I'm sorry, if it has as many errors as I suppose it has since it got deleted then it can't be posted unless they get fixed.

Now let's see...I'll read it now.

Okay, confirmed. It has some serious storyline errors here. It simply can't be around unless they get fixed. Here we go:

So the main character is walking through a decrepit neighborhood. Fine with that, although he sure knows a lot about the doll's mechanism even if he never activated it. There aren't even indications it activated itself or something. The information just...appeared here without rhyme nor reason without the laughter you say happened. The order of events is a mess there.

Just after that we have a whole paragraph of heavy exposition. It's like you suddenly interrupted the story to tell something else, it sticks out like a sore thumb. Try to integrate the exposition in, I don't know, a conversation, anything that isn't just this thick paragraph. Besides how the hell did Joel find out all this? Just that easily? It can't have happened as simple as you're making it look here. Try to go into more depth to make this all more natural.

One thing more: what was so special about that doll the main character needed to take a photo of it and had it in mind during night to the point he couldn't sleep? Absolutely nothing besides it laughing and shaking and even then nobody would think about it further than 'huh that was weird'. That'd be the end of it.

Then a dream happened...a dream, right? Then the clown doll appeared, once again without rhyme nor reason. Why would that happen? The main character was merely a teenager who was passing through the street, he literally had nothing to do with the doll. Why would it take the time to go to his bedroom and possible kill him?

All in all, there are way too many plot flaws here. I recommend you sit down and rewrite the general plot, give reasons for what's going o.

--&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 22:08, June 26, 2015 (UTC)

Try again?
I hope I'm doing this right. I believe my creepypasta was deleted due to the '?' in the title. I didn't realise that such a symbol was not permitted. It was a simple mistake and I would be happy to rename my story. ('Disconnect' works well for me.) As for misspellings and grammatical errors within the story's text, many of these are in the context of an online chat and are used to distinguish between characters. I would be grateful if my creepypasta could be considered for 'undeletion'. Many thanks, --FervidColt (talk) 00:09, June 27, 2015 (UTC)FervidColt


 * We don't delete stories for punctuation issues in the title. Please read this for more explanation. Your story starts off as if you forgot to include the introduction: "Once we’d got the “asl” thing out of the way, she wanted to know what my name was." This isn't a good introduction and does little to hook the audience in to read it.


 * Grammar: While you could argue that the grammar (in the chat logs) was intentional, when it crosses over into the narration, it only causes problems. "It was light and flannelly, and hopefully wouldn’t make me sweat too much.", "Maybe this Kelly would turn out to be fun after all. (?)", "my gut shrivelled in a single motion. " These issues make it seem like you wanted to write a story without having to deal with the grammar, spelling, punctuation, capitalization aspects of it.


 * Story issues: As mentioned above, there are a umber of issues above and the story/chat log itself comes off as plain. (The story has been covered multiple times before and your rendition is a carbon-copy of other chat-based creepy pastas. I'm sorry but your story feels rushed, has multiple issues with grammar, punctuation, spelling, and capitalization, and feels like it is re-hashed from other stories. This appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:26, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

That's fair enough. Thank you for responding so quickly. --FervidColt (talk) 00:40, June 27, 2015 (UTC)FervidColt


 * No problem, feel free to check out the writer's workshop and post your story there for feedback as they can resolve a lot of these issues before they go up against quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:42, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

I wrote a story called "Z-z" and you deleted it. Why? What was wrong with it? I had double checked it! Avsimspurple (talk) 00:47, June 27, 2015 (UTC)Alysha Sims


 * The deletion appeal is for contesting a deletion, not for asking why it was deleted. If you want that answer, message Underscorre, If you think it was up to quality standards, go through with this appeal. (Hint: don't.) EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:49, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

Transcendence got deleted with no apparent reason.
Trascendence has been deleted. This fact surprised me as I thought I had made a pretty decent pasta (compared, of course, with others on this wikia). The thing is, I'm spanish. That means I'm not a master on the english language. However, I made sure my story had the least gramatical/orthographical mistakes possible. I asked english friends, not only about the ortography, but the quality of my composition and some were quite supportive with it. I don't know your quality standards, as I'm not an admin or moderator, but I kindly insist on the revision of my story, and a reason for its deleition in case it remains being not good enough. Hope you understand why I ask for this. I'm not a newbie on writing short stories, but this one was the first I published on the Wikia and it immediately got deleted. I feel a bit of curiosity about your reasons, nothing else. Waiting for an answer.


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. Starting with the basics, remember to space out your paragraphs to avoid accidentally joining paragraphs. (As seen above)


 * Wording: "But transcendence is different: you don't have to be alive to be transcendental." Avoid starting sentences with conjunctions, also avoid redundancy by not repeating words (transcendence.)"I found a city. I found a naive (naïve) woman with some spare room. I found a job. I found a new home.". "...who contributed to humanity development..." Awkward phrasing: "the development of humanity." "Specially (especially)when", "surviving on (in) the forest would be nearly impossible.". Spelling: "exitted", "existance", etc.


 * Multiple fragmented sentences: "A blink. A scratch. A sudden banging noise. And I could see everything.". "I can make this pathetical (pathetic) world dissapear (disappear)using"


 * Punctuation: "I don't want to die"." (punctuation left outside of dialogue. "Yet it was one thing" Capitalization: "jewish (Jewish) deity"


 * Story issues: The "I'm watching you through the screen ending is fairly clichéd and while the premise is interesting, the story really didn't have any build up or tension. The experiments lacked description and that made the story feel lacking. I deleted it for not being up to quality standards and I stand by that. There are a lot of issues here the need to be resolved. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:40, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

SuperVirus.Fig
Sorry I didn't spell check it how long do I have to wait before I can upload it again or can I just edit the oneI already made


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. That means that unless this appeal is passed, your story cannot be uploaded. Unfortunately you've made no improvements to your story. Starting with the basics. There are coding errors Virtual Diary entry 567 that are on every line of the story.


 * Punctuation issues: "Today my freinds (sic) were really mean to me while we were playing borderlands 2 ("Borderlands 2".) they (They) said I wasn't the funniest person they've ever met and I think they weren't kidding which is messed up,(should be a period.)Also" Punctuation missing from multiple sentences. " found this on virus website called virusmarket.com the only reason I was doing this and was okay with it was because my brother set up this cool thing I didn't really understand how it worked at first but it's like and extra computer inside of my computer that I can just close out of so anyways I didn't find this website on the deepweb you know the thing thats like all rapists and perverts no offense because I was too scared I would get caught by the goverment so anyways when I clicked on the website it was just all black and in giant dripping blood red letters there were the words supervirus I clicked on it and it went to a full black page and the download started in the bottom of the screan so I just emailed it to all my friends a few seconds 'lol I got them'."


 * Capitalization issues: " i'm (I'm) going to pay them back with viruses", "tetris", "Bot", "Hyper" etc. Wording/spelling issues: "relly good", "freinds (sic) were found", "belive", "reasponded", etc.


 * Story issues: " friends (sic) were found with extreme liquified brain syndrome" is not a real disease, describe it as opposed to making up an illness. Then there's the ending. "are liquifidng meh braindfffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffff". How is the author writing this and how have they posted it? The entries have a lot of issues and the plot has a lot of issues. I'm sorry, but I'm going to turn down this appeal for the reasons listed above. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:30, June 28, 2015 (UTC)

Poisoned Lily
My pasta was named 'poisoned Lily' I looked it up before hand and the name wasn't used, I put time into the story so it would be top quality but when I finally post it to the wiki for one minute it as deleted.

I'm annoyed that two of my pastas had been deleted by an admin twice now just because it wasn't to the wikis Quality standers. I check for spelling errors: only 1 (I spelt the like thee) I check for grammar mistakes: None I read my story time and time again to make sure that it was told correctly and was not lazy.

If I had made any mistakes to do with visual or source stuff please tell me not delete the whole story! Dude! I tried my hardest

Mimimoo-chan (talk) 15:31, June 28, 2015 (UTC)Mimimoo-chan

(sorry for the stupid user name)

Quality issues are almost never about spelling or grammar or visual stuff.

It's about the story.

Allow me to tell you the flaws your story has:

First than all, why does a school have king cobra venom? At least apparently in permanent exhibition? There's really no reason for that to happen, specially since king cobra venom isn't something to buy in a pharmacy with a dollar. If this were a college, specially an important one, it'd be understandable, but the logic here is terrible.

Bot let's suppose it's possible for this high school to obtain snake venom and let it lay around in a laboratory...and in the wrong place, because nobody in their right minds would keep venom in middle of the acids and alkaline.

Second, so a week passed. Did the school really never notice a bottle of deadly venom was stolen? No efforts were done? Did that bottle stay in the desk in plain sight and her parents didn't see it? More logic flaws.

Spelling error: 'She was going to poison her own farther.'

Then she kills her father...with a mace. She injects him with venom and then when he wakes up all groggy she hits him with a mace.

Do you realize how badly assembled the plot is? She stole venom...and she only used to awaken her father. He didn't even have any time to process what was going on! Why the hell would she do such thing as injecting him and not leaving him there to die? The deed was done, it was just matter of letting the venom do its job! You practically made everything that had happened so far meaningless.

This just makes no sense.

Besides the way she. killed her mother, I mean how she got all furious...is not very well written. It seems so sudden, almost emotionless despite you describing how it went. You need to make the main character actually feel emotions, here you said what she was feeling but nothing really demonstrated it.

And finally:

"Studies haven't found out was was used to poison the victims but are close...."

Do you know how easy it is to find out what snake venom bites people? It's actually pretty easy. Any competent forensic worker would have found out it was cobra venom in no time.

So all in all, your story is riddled with logic flaws and that killed any quality it may have. Take a good look to your plot and rewrite it so it covers all plot holes.

Good luck.

--&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 15:59, June 28, 2015 (UTC)

Seduction   -Susie Suicide-
I'm very new on this website and genuinely confused, I don't even know if I'm posting this in the right spot. But why was my story deleted? None of it was stolen, I used good gramer, and I thought it was a good story! Can you tell me what was wrong with it so I can fix what was wrong and repost it?

How do sign my post? I'll just use those wavy things...

~


 * it was deleted for not being up to quality standards.


 * This blog on OC/CPC characters should help illuminate a lot of the issues present in your story. Your story comes off as more of a bio than an actual story. The report and then the physical description (twice) make up half of the written story and is fairly generic. This feels like just a vehicle for introducing your character and there is little story here.


 * Punctuation issues: At times in the patient file, you use conclusive punctuation and at other times you don't. "Patient's height: 5'11", "Patient's weight: 145 Lb", " Date of arrival: 3/9/10" Commas missing where needed: "In the next two days I saw her, she was beautiful.", "I'd do anything for us to be together even though I don't even know her name...", "Take precautions and whatever you do do not talk to strangers", etc.


 * Wording issues: "about a collage (college) student", "she prays on women" (Preys), etc.


 * Capitalization issues: " disorders: Insane. Bipolar, Schizophrenia (schizophrenia), and Photographic Memory (photographic memory)", "against Homosexuality (homosexuality)", "She wore a Purple (purple) and", etc.


 * Story issues: You change mediums frequently and with no warning. You go from a report to dialogue, " "Sir! Patient #10279 has escaped!" " (Which by the way, dialogue doesn't need to be underlined), to a news report, to a suicide note and it just feels like you're jumping around. The news report doesn't feel like a news report (Why describe her clothing? People change clothes on a daily basis so that is a poor identifier.) and the suicide note has a fairly ridiculous opening: "Dear who the hell ever finds my body". Typically a suicide note is to explain why they are ending their lives and not a play-by-play of their last moments. "I was watching about it on the news and there was a knock on my door, so I went to answer it."


 * You describe Susie three separate times. (Once in the psych evaluation, once in the news report, and finally in the suicide note. All of these basically say the exact same thing and really feel like padding. I'm sorry, but your story has way too many issues and is not up to our quality standards.

Anglerfish
No reason was given for why this pasta was deleted. It's obviously up to the quality standards, as it's a previously-published short story -- there are no formatting, spelling or grammar errors. There's enough plot for a micropasta (though it may take the reader a moment to figure it out; the title is a big hint). Maybe the issue was copyrights, but in that case, I'm the author of the story and have the rights to republish it. Please undelete it. Thank you!

LouisRakovich (talk) 23:51, June 30, 2015 (UTC)LouisRakovich


 * Actually the story was the reason it was deleted. There seem to be a number of contradictions and awkward phrasing in the story.


 * Wording issues: "Not much older than a girl-child, and how old is she, really?" Girl-child seems redundant. It would be like saying food-burger. Girl and child imply the same thing. A number of fragmented/broken sentence: "Old enough.", "But strange.", etc.


 * Story issues: The story feels very bare bones and needs a lot more fleshing out. Dr. Conrad picks up a girl at a restaurant and takes her back to her room where it is revealed she's an anglerfish-esque entity. It could be an interesting/involving story if more description was put into the characters and their actions were more expanded on. It just feels anemic without any real horror elements until the end and even there, it is one that has to be inferred by the reader as opposed to being utilized effectively. See Lovecraft's The Horror at Red Hook for a similar plot that builds suspense and horror.


 * The ending comes off as anti-climactic without any real sense of tension. "The girl whimpers. In the new half-darkness, she’s glowing with a faint white light" At least explain to the audience how the anglerfish hunts and create a sense of danger or tension. It really feels like this is an abridged version of a story as opposed to a good short story that cuts out parts that would build an interesting background or involve the readers in the story. Here is a guide on what makes a micro pasta good and common issues authors fall into while writing these stories. As it stands, the story has number of issues involving wording and plot, and really needs some work. It is not up to quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:09, July 1, 2015 (UTC)

Anglerfish
No reason was given for why this pasta was deleted. It's obviously up to the quality standards, as it's a previously-published short story -- there are no formatting, spelling or grammar errors. There's enough plot for a micropasta (though it may take the reader a moment to figure it out; the title is a big hint). Maybe the issue was copyrights, but in that case, I'm the author of the story and have the rights to republish it. Please undelete it. Thank you!

LouisRakovich (talk) 23:51, June 30, 2015 (UTC)LouisRakovich


 * Actually the story was the reason it was deleted. There seem to be a number of contradictions and awkward phrasing in the story.


 * Wording issues: "Not much older than a girl-child, and how old is she, really?" Girl-child seems redundant. It would be like saying food-burger. Girl and child imply the same thing. A number of fragmented/broken sentence: "Old enough.", "But strange.", etc.


 * Story issues: The story feels very bare bones and needs a lot more fleshing out. Dr. Conrad picks up a girl at a restaurant and takes her back to her room where it is revealed she's an anglerfish-esque entity. It could be an interesting/involving story if more description was put into the characters and their actions were more expanded on. It just feels anemic without any real horror elements until the end and even there, it is one that has to be inferred by the reader as opposed to being utilized effectively. See Lovecraft's The Horror at Red Hook for a similar plot that builds suspense and horror.


 * The ending comes off as anti-climactic without any real sense of tension. "The girl whimpers. In the new half-darkness, she’s glowing with a faint white light" At least explain to the audience how the anglerfish hunts and create a sense of danger or tension. It really feels like this is an abridged version of a story as opposed to a good short story that cuts out parts that would build an interesting background or involve the readers in the story. Here is a guide on what makes a micro pasta good and common issues authors fall into while writing these stories. As it stands, the story has number of issues involving wording and plot, and really needs some work. It is not up to quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:09, July 1, 2015 (UTC)

Pretty Legs
mine (Mine) got deleted for no reason, i (I) checked my spelling and made a good story, you didn't (didn't) even give any one a chance to read it, when i (I) posted it i (I)checked back a bit later and saw that there were / symbols all over that i (I) didnt (didn't) put there and my story was already deleted before i (I)could fix anything, please put the story up ,(Space not needed) it deserves to be read


 * Coding errors that are present on every line: "Vickie Marshall was a waitress at burnie's pancake house in Louisville, Kentucky, she was a attractive woman, 26 years old, green eyes, long black hair.

" Your story is on large paragraph which in our quality standards is a big no-no.


 * Capitalization issues: "house on south street, (South Street)" Street names are proper nouns as are TV shows. "x-files ". "Linda said(comma missing) " i (I)will come visit you Thursday, "(Space not needed), etc.


 * Wording issues: " One day Vickie was at home, (space not needed) cooking dinner while the x-files played on her 42 inch plasma screen in the living room, she just set the table when there was a knock on the door, she opened it and there was no one there, she looked and saw a note on her step, she grabbed it and took it inside and read it , it read(comma missing) " such pretty legs you have, i (I) think on thursday i (I) will take them"" Run on sentence,


 * Punctuation errors: "girl(apostrophe missing)s legs again", etc.


 * I'm sorry, but I couldn't even finish this story due to the multiple punctuation, capitalization, wording, grammatical, and story issues. This appeal is being denied for not meeting the bare minimum quality standards for this site and in its current state does not deserve to be read due to the lack of attention paid to the story.. Please take the time to read and proof-read your stories before submitting them. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 06:55, July 5, 2015 (UTC)

A Fair End

 * Please read the header next time when making a deletion appeal as posting stories in their entirety clogs up the appeal. Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards.

Wording issues: "She waved her tail vigorously to the (her) sides greeting her master." (the sides could imply another side.), "That moment I felt something I hadn’t felt since forever." Fragmented sentences: "Until now." You also start a number of sentences with conjunctions which makes the story appear choppy.

Punctuation issues: A majority of dialogue is missing punctuation. "Mommy won't be joining us for dinner tonight, Molly", “The name is not important. Only life is”, “Life”, etc. Capitalization issues: "“Yes mother” It (it) said.", "Only life is” It (it)", etc.

Story issues: The letter needs to be spaced as it is one large paragraph. Your story shifts perspectives without any indicator. It goes from this: "He went outside the street to buy food for Molly and the next thing he saw was a white blaze that came towards him at great speed." to this: "“Good evening Officer Bradley(comma/period missing)” Chief Hardy said. “What do we have tonight?”"

Story issues cont.: While the introduction is good, the middle and end portions are rushed. Thomas finishes the letter and is killed by the creature. There needs to be more build up to it. (Especially since you build up the necessity to wear the necklace and the wife's fear of the being.) Thomas also randomly blacks out with little to no explanation. "Thomas blacked out in that moment.". When do police give away items that are present in a crime scene? “Excuse me Officer, it seems that you found a necklace in that man’s possession. It belongs to me, it was a gift he got from my granddaughter. I would like to have it back” This is a pretty big breach in police protocol. There is also very little explanation behind the shadow's motivations as well and it makes the story feel anemic and not very fleshed out. Those were the major reasons why I deleted it and why I am turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:14, July 8, 2015 (UTC)

Stopping The Clock
I really dont know why my CreepyPasta was rejected.

Do you think you can tell me what is wrong and I can make a rough draft and show you it?

Sincerely,TheHorridKnocker


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards as you were told when you posted it on your user page and when you later posted it to the site.


 * Wording issues: "Insert page content here." Please proof-read your story. Capitalization: "...A (a) happy person", " Gray hair and Silver,piercing", "Beenie,Trench coat,and Military boots"


 * Punctuation: "When I turned 7(comma missing) it all changed." "On my 7th birthday(comma missing) I was sitting down in my chair",


 * Spacing issues: "present,I", "pale,shaky,and", "me,then" You need to space after using punctuation.


 * Story issues: the story is very rushed and there is little to no build-up. Why does he have a catch-phrase? "said(comma missing) "Knock,Knock...Knocker(')s here to cut the clock..." And how does this catchphrase fit into the story. The ending is very anti-climactic: "2 (Two) weeks later I heard he escaped and was still lurking in the dark woods..." This really has no sense of tension or creepiness due to its rushed nature. I'm sorry, but this story needs a lot of work and currently doesn't meet the bare minimum of quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 03:24, July 8, 2015 (UTC)

Injected into darkness
Hello! Im sorry for my recent attempt at uploading a creepypasta, im not very used to it infact im new. But I should've thought how to upload instead of jumping into it. I would like to ask permission to reupload my creepypasta, but I want to start fresh again. I will type up my story in microsoft word and go to the "Writer Workshop" first to make sure its all good to go before actually uploading it. I will be very appreciative if I can get permission to reupload, I will not jump straight to reuploading it. I will take the necessary steps and procedures before reuploading "Injected into darkness". Again, I apoligise for not taking it slow and not following the necessary steps before uploading. I hope you can allow me to try again. Thank you for your time.

ChaiseV (talk) 22:22, July 8, 2015 (UTC) ChaiseV


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. As you have no updated version, I'm afraid I have to turn down this appeal for numerous issues. Starting with the basics, it was improperly formatted.


 * Punctuation missing from contractions. "I cant remember", "now im (I'm) here", "whats in this facility,", etc. Hyphens missing from words directly impacting on each other. "non stop", "mountain side", etc.


 * Punctuation issues cont.: punctuation missing from dialogue: "" I was an adventurer, but I always had a crew with me, my buddy Jeremiah he was German along with Sarah who was american like me"", "Our associates will be here to talk you soon", "We will try Mr.Everett(space needed), we will try(period missing)", etc. Apostrophes missing from words denoting possession: "Fuhrer(')s private research"


 * Words improperly capitalized, "world war 2.", "im", "We set out all the way to (Censored) in germany." etc. Words improperly spaced: "Sgt.Ferris", "Dr.Gears", "Dr.L", etc.


 * Story issues: Your story also violates the no-spinoff rule by feature the SCP organization. The report format also detracts from the story as the recounting of events needs to be a lot more fleshed out. I'm sorry, but there are too many issues present here and the story violates our site rules so this appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:38, July 8, 2015 (UTC)

Double Take
Okay so I'm new to this sight and I would like to work on my creepy pasta stories. I understand that Double Take could have some minor spelling errors and at one point was possibly a wall of text but I can chage that. I asked the person who deleted my pastas how they didn't meet the quality standards and he didn't answer. But I would like to chage it and seperate it up and change things around and I want to see what people think of my origonal stories Which is why I would like my pasta Double Take to be undeleted. Elf Queen (talk) 05:06, July 9, 2015 (UTC)


 * The story was and still isn't up to quality standards. There are wording, punctuation, and story issues.


 * Wording: awkward phrasing. "They call it Double Take because, it appears to be two separate creatures when it is one. " Redundancy issues, once you've established the entities' name, there is no need to repeat it multiple times. (In one paragraph, you mention Double Take's name eight times in eight sentences.) "The first wound fell upon the child who’s (whose) dying screams woke his father who then was equally slaughtered in their bed." (awkward phrasing) Grammar: it's=it is, its=possession. "it’s voice", "it’s next victim". Whose= indicatory, who's=who is/was/has


 * Punctuation issues: "One is the voice of a small child, male in gender that keeps saying(comma missing) “I want to play.”", "The other is a deeper voice that sends chills down the spine that says(comma missing) “I’ve got plans for you.”", "The mysterious killer said with a chuckle as they approached the bed where the two helpless figures slept.(should be a comma) “Now the pain that you have brought me shall end!”"


 * Capitalization issues: "“Let’s play a game.” The (the) child states(comma missing) unable to be seen.", "“I’ve got plans for you. You're all mine and there is no escape.” The (the) father replied to the boy’s screams.", "“Let me go! Let me out!” The teen yelled as some tears began to fall."


 * Story issues: Dialogue needs to be spaced out so two speakers are never talking on the same line. The ending is also fairly generic. "There was (were) 10 people like Susan who were released then went mysteriously missing(comma missing) well 10 so far. Luckily you might meet Double Take and escape, or Unluckily (unluckily) meet Double Take and get killed if you make a wrong move. (awkward phrasing) Don’t make them angry or you might end up dead." The story also comes off as an introduction to your creepy pasta monster rather than an involving tale due to the fact that its backstory takes a majority of the story and the story in the forefront isn't really fleshed out. I'm sorry, but there are too many issues present here and as I was reading, I kept finding more. I'm going to have to turn down this appeal for the reasons listed above. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:13, July 9, 2015 (UTC)

Time to play
Okay, so I would like to change and I would also like to see what people think of it. I understand that there may be a few errors in it but it's an origional pasta and I tried to do it from the point of view of the creature you know to put a new spin on the usual pasta. But I am new to this site and I am trying to get my writing out there. I didn't get a response when I asked how my story didn't match the quality standards so I am requesting a deletion appeal. Please I would appreciate it so I can see if what I write are good or not. I hope your day is great. Elf Queen (talk) 05:12, July 9, 2015 (UTC)


 * After reading the pasta, I found that it did not follow up to quality standards. The story has no suspense or build up what so ever. The creature/being appears to be bland and rather uninteresting as well as the two other characters. Nothing really develops throughout the course of the story besides the being trying to kill the other two characters. There are some minor grammatical errors, but that can be fixed easily. I suggest develop more of the being and the general plot. Avoid generic monsters and show, not tell.


 * Sloshedtrain  Talk   Contribs   █  10:02, July 9, 2015 (UTC)

The Case of May Canner,1997
I would like to know why The Case of May Canner,1997 got deleted. Thanks


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. This appeal is also being turned down for the same reasons.


 * Wording issues: "I've been in school for investigating for a few years..." Investigating what? Crime scenes, private/personal matters, be descriptive. Redundancy issues: "All the internship required me to do was fetch the boss some coffee and watch and learn but I wasn't alone." (Sub out one of those 'ands'.) "only one of the interns and me (I) stayed.". "Her appearance consisted of blonder (blonde) hair, blue eyes and a birth mark on her right arm.",


 * Capitalization issues: "mommy (Mommy)!", "June 14th and that  Her (her) parents said they were visiting family in Mexico.", etc.


 * Story issues: the computer controlling itself was a generic/cliched addition. If all this is happening around 1997 (see title), how are they using memory sticks, Vimeo, and Youtube? "Now for obvious reasons, I cannot give you the link or put the very video on YouTube or Vimeo." Why would the protagonist put the video on Vimeo if he found it to be so horrific? The descriptions towards the end need work. "Blood was everywhere and I was bawling out me eyes like I never ever did in my life (even when I was a baby).". This line needs some explanation: "But smashing my computer was not an option now because the girl had blonde hair and blue eyes." So the protagonist would have smashed the computer if the child had different eye and hair color?


 * The ending: "Of course the government did not release any information of this at all because they knew it would frighten civilians because the "Panda Man" was reported missing a day before the video was found." The ending needs more of an impact and it really comes off as rushed due to these issues. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:17, July 9, 2015 (UTC)

The Haunting of Bonte
I'm pretty confused about this. The reason for deletion given was that it didn't meet the quality standards, and the example given was the first two sentences of the post with no other explanation provided. The only thing I can think of is that it didn't have a good enough hook and, frankly, I think deleting a page just for that is completely unreasonable.

Additionally, I received a message telling me that I contributed an "Unfinished Page" (which I didn't). Are slight edits of my work not allowed? I was trying to fix the formatting to meet another of your quality standards. Sorry if I didn't do it right.


 * A haunted butt plug? Come on. Now you've been banned for posting a troll pasta.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 01:17, July 10, 2015 (UTC)


 * "Funkytown Prologue" was in fact an unfinished page. It set up the story, but was incomplete. As for "The Haunting of Bonte" starting with the basics, you numbered the paragraphs using hashtags and then you indented the paragraphs. Please take a look at the other stories. Trying to indent your stories can actually cause serious formatting issues. That aside, the story wasn't up to quality standards.


 * Formatting issues: you have multiple speakers on the same line. ""It must have cost you a fortune," one of them said with a gasp. "I was surprised to have found it at all," Caleb responded. "As it turns out, Bonte's son didn't want to follow in his footsteps. He sold all of his father's toys after his death.""


 * Story issues: A lot of the story comes off like a troll pasta. "Caleb's favorite (and recently deceased) male pornstar, Big Daddy "Bunghole" Bonte. Having looked up to Big Daddy "Bunghole" Bonte as his idol, even a sort of mentor, he wasn't going to use such a priceless item. He had plenty of others. His rectum was not worthy.", "Writing the apparent movement off as a side effect of the penis enlargement pills he regularly ingested, he turned his focus to the television.", " "Those dick pills cause some serious hallucinations," he said to himself. "This isn't good for me."", etc.


 * Story issues: if Caleb believes one of the guests were the culprit, why would he send them home? "Hastily, he told his guests to leave and began to search high and low for the missing dilator. There was no sign of a break-in, leading him to believe that one of his guests was the culprit." It just comes off as odd that he would let someone leave even with searching them. Why would the ghost take the dilator, return it and then steal it again? "The antique butt plug stood in the corner. He almost jumped at the sight of it. Relieved to have found it, but still anxious, he shakily picked it up and placed it back in the display case." especially when it murders him later for it. "A grimy hand rested on his shoulder. It smelled rotten. "It's time to give me back what's mine," said the raspy voice of Bonte into Caleb's ear."


 * Story issues cont.: The ending needs quite a bit of work. ""Thanks." The dilator itself was never found." Caleb recently received the item, has no one else had any other issues with the item. The overall plot feels rushed and there isn't much build-up or description of the ghost. Pair that with the item and the story comes off as more of a joke than an actually attempt at a creepy pasta. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:25, July 10, 2015 (UTC)

Pyromaniac
Why was Pyromaniac deleted? This is the third story I have written that has gotten deleted (one was on another account), and it's making me mad. I worked extra hard on this story, I made sure to use good grammar and correct punctuation, and I thought about my story line for a long time. I was sure that this would be the story that didn't get deleted.

Look, I know it wasn't perfect, but it was a lot better than some other stuff you accept on this site. I'm not trying to make anyone mad or start unnecessary drama, I just want my story back up. I'm asking, please. If you don't want it to be up, just please tell me why.

Asking Alex (talk) 06:35, July 13, 2015 (UTC) Asking Alex (talk) 06:34, July 13, 2015 (UTC)