Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26502770-20150617190235/@comment-26502770-20150618182433

SoPretentious wrote: There's spacing after punctuation missing throughout.

[breathing softly and observing The (the) night sky not taking notice that]

[Thats (that's) why he was]

[He liked to lose himself to the to the dark blue void that was the night sky(.)]

[He hated looking at that closet door he sweared (swore) for his life something is lurking there]

[It started (stared) him into the eye(.) Daniel felt its eyes penetrating his soul.] ''Also, the first sentence is a little lackluster, and the second is a little trite. I would change them both up a bit.''

[Daniel started sweating he was frozen.]

[The figure had no face It (it) was completely Black (black)]

[Daniel slowly twisted his head facing his doorway there stood a figure resembling an old hag]

[It slowly floated towards him hovering about 2 (two) inches from the floor]

["Danny,Who was the old lady(?)"] A spacing and a capitalization issue.

"squated" should be "squatted", "started" should be "stared" Thanks for notifying me of it ill edit it when i get some free time