Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30102154-20160929213236/@comment-24101790-20160929213845

Sorry but there are a lot of issues here. Besides not properly capitalizing proper nouns and the start of sentences, your story is also a blacklisted subject which needs approval before posting. Couple that with the frequent misspellings, punctuation errors (you forget to use periods), and story issues (you lift a lot of generic plot points from haunted gaming stories, your plot is rushed, and the story is unfinished) and you have a story that's unlikely to pass the appeal in its current state.