Talk:Sarah's Story/@comment-24196787-20151021175034

So after reading both "A Figure in the Fog" and "Sarah's Story", I can say that I'm really impressed by the author. IMO, I thought that these were the two that managed to coalesce going by storyline, as they both occur in the same town (mostly) and they have the same antagonist and mentions of the previous protags.

Ok, getting on with the review.

Sarah and David. Yes, I'm looking them over as a pair. I liked these two characters immensely, but there wasn't, and yes, I know there isn't usually, much character buildup to Sarah. Her backstory wasn't explained as much as David's, and their "intermission" period, as it were. The period I refer to is between the time Sam is born, David loses his job, and they move to The Wake.

Moving on to the antagonists.

Lilith is Lady Wicker's real name? Cool, I dig. BUT, since she didn't have that physical presence in the story, like "Figure in the Fog" did, I didn't feel that creep factor reappearing in this one. Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed this particular pasta, but I tend to compare it to FitF a lot. "Where's the black-eyed children? Where's the fog at? Wha-?" This was my initial reaction to the midpoint in the story, where Sarah has the dream in which she encounters Lilith. Yes, I know it said there's fog seeping around the room, but I remember it being FUCKING EVERYWHERE in FitF, not just "oh look, there's a bit of fog in the room to create a creep factor." I'm sorry, but this isn't up there. I had high hopes after reading FitF that this one might live up to it, but it didn't have me looking around the room like FitF did.

"Sarah's Story"

My rating: 8/10 - Possible recommendation.