Talk:White T-shirts/@comment-27614308-20160115135428

Oh noooooo. A t-shirt. How scary. Woooooo.

I'm not exceptionally familiar with everything yet, but I doubt this story meets the quality standards on the wiki. I don't know if there's something that'll bring the admin's attention to it, so I'll simply review this down here. To the credit of the author, at least things are spelled correctly.

"I will never forget the first paranormal experience I had."

I will never forget the first time I read "I will never forget {insert scary thing here}."

"I was sitting in the matching chair at the corner of my room, where the desk was set up, when I decided to make a video using my brand new piece of Apple technology."

"Where the desk was set up" seems unnecessary. Most of the time, people understand that if you're sitting in the matching chair, you're probably by the desk. Though, that could be me being nitpicky.

Getting out of quoting everything, the story's problems include a plot that is basically made up of a shit-ton of coincidences, one after the other, with nothing tying them together. It's basically summarized as "ooooohhhhh, spooky coinkydink shocker." Of course, starting off with a cliche is pretty bad in and of itself.