Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35522711-20180507234134/@comment-9041013-20180508232214

Skull2237 wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote:

Skull2237 wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: Does anyone even bother reading the bible anymore? Like seriously, doesn't anyone know that Angels are walking nukes in (mostly) humanoid shape? I mean, sure, you've the celestial beasts who look like Lovecraft came up with their visual concepts. Four heads, multiple wings, shiny, huge and so on and so forth, then you also have the wheels, which are wheels, within wheels with eyes, creepy and all but they usually look somewhat human. You also have the Archangels, God's literal helpers, it is said Michael will end up fighting the big guy himself.

Yeah, also, demons, according to Christianity are a bunch of deformed fallen angels, so your story makes some sense.

I do like how angels are trapped inside demons, however, how about going in a direction of making angels turn into demons?

It's rather short, feels weirdly pased, and somewhat unrealistic (how does a simple human kill creatures physically superior to itself so easily), grammar needs some work.

You could do a lot of it, but you'd need to work on that. The "demons" aren't necessarily demons in our sense (though, to be fair, I could have used something better than simply "demons"). Think of the descriptions given. Who do these "demons" remind you of? (P.S. With your advice, however, I might see about changing it to what we see through the perspective of to calling them "aberrations" or something along that line) well yeah, your wording kind of fits the original greek etymology. Demon comes from Daimon which is basically "spirit" in ancient Greek, demons, angels, elfs, whatver, they're all some kind of "Daimon". Your demons remind me of folkloric Trolls, large, lumbering, stupid, disgusting etc.

You can do a million things with the idea you've here, you could also make it a little less demanding by saying your "soul" travels to wherever and you get to witness these things from afar or something like that.

The possibilities are endless here, but this is somewhat shallow Erm, I meant that the "demons" are humans. Oi, I completely missed that.