Talk:La Llorona Hunting/@comment-5733573-20180818170545

Well, this northern Yankee really liked your story! Anything that adds a new layer to an established legend is always really fun to read.

It does have some issues, however. The biggest one is the shifting verb tense. When you're describing events that took place in the past, you really need to use past tense throughout. Secondly, there are a few sentences with missing words, so I would suggest a thorough proofread.

Also, I think the next to last paragraph should be placed much earlier in the story. This is the information about how the crying of children brings on La Llorona faster.

Apart from those things, this is a really strong story. The plotting and characters are great and your description of the big moment is vivid and clear. Really nice work!