Talk:Twitched/@comment-17737430-20150101210509

The jump in POV (point of view) was a bit jarring, unfortunately, and kinda threw the whole story off a bit for me. I do like the concept, however, and most of the story's delivery, though the ending seems a little...off. "Controlling you"? I'm not sure where that comes into play, unless this "Zachary" character is a metaphor for uncontrolled extreme cases of mental disorder in people...in which case this is pretty genius.