Talk:The Cell Phone Game/@comment-25139605-20140704182231

Thank you for sharing something you clearly worked so hard on. I love this story. I almost lost interest as the character became somewhat complacent, but he was very artfully pulled into a world of horror and I was hooked. At first, Rottenbacher was an almost comically stereotypical Neo-Nazi, and instead of assuming he was poorly written I was expecting you would elaborate, and I was not disappointed. The revelation that there was a survivor of the previous game was expertly done.

I have only one problem;

"Stuff like that's beyond people like you and me. We shouldn't go messing with stuff like that. What if you got involved in it and then it all turned out to be true? What would I do if something happened to you? Promise me you won't go messing around in that stuff." "Well, I don't think it's right to mess around in stuff you don't understand, you know?"

It's just my opinion, of course, but I feel like the word 'stuff' came up far too many times over the course of one conversation, though It honestly takes nothing away from the story, and I was immersed enough soon after to forget about It until the end.

I honestly look forward to reading your other work. I hope you still actively write, you're a skilled storyteller.