Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37878098-20190109205918/@comment-36627132-20190110015012

Even though I've already gave an opinion, I'm going to go into more detail as I feel that my initial comment was slightly lacking.

First off, as Dr. Bob said, read the spinoffs rule page. Your first story was a haunted game pasta, and this one is a lost episode pasta.

The story itself is done in a rushed style which (as Bob and Bloody have pointed out) lacks details about what actually happens in the show. We are given a short summary of the show itself and that is it. We pretty much have your narrator going "Yeah I watched this scary game show, I found out the failing constestants never came back. It was scary. Then I watched something else."

You had the opportunity to describe the horrific challenges which could have given this story some much needed horror, but instead just simply told us that the show is horror themed and left it at that.

Like I said the only thing remotely creepy about this story is the line about the failing contestants never coming back. You never explain how the main character finds this out or why. Did for some reason they look them up? If people are actually being killed then why would this show even be allowed to exist in the first place? The story lacks actual resolve.