Talk:Gravel.com/@comment-11180645-20131128082812

The story is ok, a 6.5 out of 10. The concept was good and could make for an excellent story, but the end product seemed rushed. You as a writer, also have potential. If you want my opinion, rewrite the story so it is longer and more fleshed out.

Also, try making your pastas more interesting by adding more description and writing techniques.

A saw your comment on Mrcreepypastas video by the way.

Anyway, I think you good be a good writer and I look forward to reading your work in the future.