Talk:A Phone in the Snow/@comment-5733573-20180409170812

I like the idea of this story, even if it is a little cliche. I'm afraid the ending doesn't make a whole lot of sense as there's no way for the speaker to know what he concludes. I also feel like I'm missing something important because the non-English word that can be heard over the phone is never translated. Google Translate tells me its Ukranian for "better," but I don't really understand why that would be spoken at that moment. There's also a bit too much going on in some paragraphs, which makes shifts and transitions confusion. Overall, cool idea. Just needs more development and polish. I'd be very interested to see a future version of this pasta.