Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25259255-20140803175352/@comment-25148755-20140805031532

Not all gaming pastas are blacklisted, although haunted and possessed ones (of which this certainly is) are.

Writing wise, there are a few grammatical errors and your style is decent enough although there isn't anything about it to make it stand out. Overall, this pasta would probably meet the quality standards with a few corrections.

Aside from the fact that the content is blacklisted, the story itself was ok although the entire first part where you are playing the game is honestly pretty boring, and not particularly scary. The story picks up a bit with the black out and the demon revealing himself but...it's just super vanilla, if that makes sense. One thing that did strike me is with the demon's speech and the character passing on the cd it sorta felt like a weird lovechild betwen the Matrix and the Call of Cthulu.