Talk:The Number of Darkness/@comment-28088262-20150730135229

As soon as I saw 'fornication', I knew I was in for a rough ride ;-) Anyway, here's your review. I'll start with the positives: This pasta was great and there were very few things I could criticize - even if there were, I am in no posititon/level of education to do so right now. However, since you asked, I'll make three minor suggestions.
 * The use of vocabulary was on point, and admittedly, I learnt a few new words. I imagine you have a qualification/degree in English? I'm not kidding, it's truly outstanding - as always.
 * The character's changing mindset throughout the piece was portrayed very well.
 * The formal writing style was appropriate for the time it was set in, thus the tone was realistic.
 * The 'daunting shadow behind religion' is also portrayed very well.
 * "I will name my son after you, Father. For you will be his father, too." Very unsettling.
 * All in all, there's not much praise left to give you - the comments below speak my thoughts accurately. Disturbing, well-composed, well-researched.
 * "Nearly all our women folk dead. That fairer sex, it appears, did not have the strength and wherewithal to fight the disease like the men." This bothered me slightly, because it didn't have much explanation behind it. Very minor query, but just worried it might look sexist to some people.
 * I'm not sure of the exact criteria for NSFW, but this is certainly inclining towards it. I would suggest putting a 'graphic' warning for some of our pickier readers.
 * Spice up the dates a bit! Put them in bold or something if you have time. It will improve the aesthetic feel to it.

In conclusion, chilling read and great job!