Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27161672-20160330211935/@comment-25763427-20160405150914

Well, I think you should shorten the story and create a more cohesive plot. If you shorten the story to take place over two days (the starvation and torture can have started previous to the story beginning). Having the responsible party never be revealed is an interesting idea but it leaves your story kind of unsatisfying. The character's are likeable enough, but it takes too long for something dread-inducing to happen.

Hopefully this helps.