Talk:Blitzkrieg/@comment-24881871-20140630105051

Before I edited this, the sentences were oddly constructed, many simple words were misspelled, and the grammar was poor in general. Despite all this, I really enjoyed the pasta for some reason. It took me some time to put my finger on it, but I finally identified it as the palpable atmosphere.

The character describes everything exactly as an eight-year-old child would, and that's what makes this pasta feel real. Not the descriptions, but the simple observations of a young Ukrainian boy. I only fixed what was absolutely necessary in an effort to retain the original atmosphere.

The only disappointment was the final paragraph. What does BEN Drowned have to do with World War II? What made you decide to end with a quote from it? I would remove that part if I were you. Other than that, this was very enjoyable.