Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20180204134225/@comment-7673575-20180204163405

Ooh, one nice poem, lemmy tell you that.

The only real issue is this specific verse(?): I stop my pace, and freeze, in terror, as I somehow, unaware, have stepped back backward to the swamp lands I abandoned out of fear. ''Could it be another marsh? Or something of an awful marker?'' Have I truly walked, not farther, rather back to swamp lands here? The commas in the first line are flagrantly abused: cut them down a notch. There are also some issues with rhyme and wording. Personally, I would write it down like this: I stop my pace and freeze in terror, as I somehow, unaware, have stepped back into swamp lands I abandoned out of fear. Could it be another marsh or some sort of awful snare? Have I truly walked, not farther, rather back to swamp lands here? But that is just my opinion.

Overall, there are some minor grammar and formatting errors you should fix before the final check, but it's mostly fine.

Side note: I see a lot of influences from "Raven" here, and I like it.