Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33135370-20180819022510/@comment-35911608-20180819030701

Eh... I'm not really feeling this one, sorry. It's too cliched and pretty bland in terms of presentation. Also the MC's knowledge of events is in wack: how could they have supposedly seen their dog being ripped to shreds, outside, from the keyhole of their closet? Stuff like that pulls me out of the story. I don't really have anything else to say..