Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181017225809/@comment-9041013-20181018101115

I'm gonna start off by saying, don't rely on that gender guesser thing, it assumed Spirit Voices is a european male. Among with some other female writers... If you want a good insight on how to write a female perspective, try asking a female relative, friend or partner.

As for the story itself, I don't know. It feels like all of your stories are a repeat at this point, a bunch of stupid kids who live in a small town and have no clue about all the other shit people go through in this town, somehow.... someway... end up dying by doing something ridiculously stupid.

I mean, sure, the concept of vengeful spirits of slaves still haunting the building where their owner used to reside is a good one. Everything around it though is just, well at this point, getting stale.

Leave the kids behind, switch it up to a couple buying the house, or some actual junkies stumbling in there, or something that is not thirteen year olds who curse a lot for no good reason.

The execution is nice, the idea is nice, overall it's alright. It's just, the setting needs to change. No way so much crap goes on in Maysburg and nobody tells their friends about the giant tenticle monster their cousin encountered in woods. Hell, it's kind of weird nobody pulls of a Aokigahara out there, in those woods, planting signs and stuff to warm people of potential dangers. I mean, kids keep going missing there. Kids.