Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24849549-20140929052250/@comment-25458443-20140929055513

I liked it a lot actually. not very scary but that's subjecive. I would consider rewriting the ending though. it seemed a bit forced. Keep the idea. but maybe move the gunshot to earlier, after he states he calls the police. and revise the last 5 sentences.

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