Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27697299-20160330030638/@comment-27905100-20160331030549

Need grammar check

Seriously, it needs a huge grammar overhaul what with like 5% of the words that shouldn't be capitalized being capitalized.

Good concept, but could use some rewriting.

You have some really awkward wording in some places. Read it over an you'll see what I mean

Menos? Is that really his name? Is that a demon or something?

Save the lives of millions. Dude, that's like killing a person every second for the rest of you're life, and that's just for a single million. Remember, you're just a normal, possessed dude who goes around murdering and eating people for no apparent reason.

Overall, not too bad. But read it over for yourself, too.

good luck with this.