Talk:The Starkman/@comment-25052433-20140805215450

I actually enjoyed reading this. Just a few grammatical errors that I was happy to fix.

What went right:

-You set and mood and coupled that with an isolated location to really bring the reader into the story. Rural farms are creepy enough without stirring in monster dogs and crazy skinny men, so all in all, a good use of suspense build-up.

-In the beginning of the story, I found the characters interactions, actions and reactions to all be believable.

What would have improved the experience for me:

-Honestly, most of the critiques for me come at the end. I can understand the guy going back to the farm, as this was probably building up in him most of his life. However, upon finding the dead bodies, why wouldn't he have called the police. Not only did he discover a grizzly crime scene, but he would have opened himself up to criminal charges for not filing a report after finding a room for of mutilated corpses.

Overall, a very ambitious pasta.

7/10.