Creepypasta Wiki talk:Deleted Page/Jeff the Killer/@comment-28926895-20131103194021/@comment-28926895-20131105183010

However, it would've been nice to have a more gradual delve into insanity. Like:

Him crying at night,

or his parents starting to have a broken relationship,

bullying at school,

the bus driver could've been used as a plot point(they were supposed to board there, right?).

he starts  getting more unhinged, having anger, breakdowns, maybe lashing out on someone moking him about his brother,

and  ending up in the violent fight scene.

And maybe during the rehabilitation after wards, he becomes less of himself(Not responding with his parents, becoming agressive and some mental thoughts to cement this, leadig up to his self mutilation and killing his parents.