Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44246754-20191027204522/@comment-36627132-20191027213534

I'm going to start this review by saying that you should start a new paragraph when someone is speaking, and when changing speakers.

That aside, the story suffers from spelling errors, awkward wording, the narration is slighty too interactive, seemingly lazy narrative, and, I'm sorry to say, a weak plot.

Almost nothing happens until the main character is almost robbed, only to be saved by a cat for some reason. A lot of the story feels like pointless filler.

Nothing creepy actually happens. The story relies too heavily on people doing bad things for a cheap scare, which isn't too successful.

The story goes virtually nowhere. The only character development we get is the main character shifting from hating cats to adoring them.