Talk:Sirens/@comment-25226524-20140830184054

This is a strange one, but I like it. You did an excellent job of bringing the scene to life. Using the car accident as the catalyst to her discovery was a very creative and wise choice. I think the vagueness of what they are actually works well in this instance, it allows the reader to let their imagination run wild as to what they are and where they've come from.

The description is what makes this story what it is. I actually felt like I was there. You definitely threw me on the title, as I was expecting something to do with sirens of the sea. This definitely has room for expansion, as do all of your stories. Not because they necessarily need it, but because they are just so creative. As I said though, I think the vagueness works for this one.

This one was a little disturbing, which I like. The descriptions of what they were doing to the father made me cringe. This is another good effort in my opinion. You seem to have a knack for writing stories that could be turned into a series, and this one is no exception. You seem to have one of the more creative imaginations I've come into contact with on this site. Keep up the good work.

P.S. I did fix a couple minor mistakes involving ellipses. I'm not sure if there's a consensus on ellipsis use/technique, but I try to adhere to what I know as the most widely accepted uses. If you disagree with any of my changes, always feel free to change them back.