Talk:Wendigo: A Terrifying Story/@comment-25936862-20180212031202

The story is frankly boring to read, the protagonist doesn't really have much of a personality making him very hard to relate to or feel bad for him. The protagonist claims to know a lot about the Wendigo and even the other boys search up information which would lead me to believe the author took some time to search up information, but this is immediately ignored when Enrique was possesed and how he transformed. The ending is cliche on many levels and leaves nothing to the imagination despite not being explicit in exactly what he means.

During the story when Enrique does transform it's straight up said what he's become despite it being very obvious to the reader what happened. It seems as though what the author wishes to detail changes, the area in which the protagonist was travelling was detailed enough to give me an image of where he was, the Wendigo's appearance was also detailed earlier, but the transformation and the events are fairly boring and could be further detailed.

The grammar and sentence structures were very well done, if there were mistakes I didn't notice them at all, but of course grammar isn't what makes a story but it can ruin one. The story could've been expanded but it seemed as if the author was rushed for time as they quickly trying to get to the monster attacking instead of building up to it and giving an atmosphere to the story.

Overall the story was fairly boring and lacked any real tension or personality but I do feel it had potential if the author took more time in making this.