Talk:Infanticide/@comment-28266772-20161031154534

Hey Levi, I enjoyed the story quite a lot but was disappointed to see so many mechanical errors. I corrected most of them but one of them I was a tad concerned about. I had to change the following line:

On the left, an animatronic baby sobs a piercing wail as it shakes its fists unintelligently before its face...

It just made no sense as you had it before and it was necessary to do some very minor editing to bring it to, what I think was, your original intention. Let me know if not. Other than that I enjoyed this story, I just think next time you might want to drop your story by the workshop or put it through a detailed spellchecker.