Talk:What Remains.../@comment-33089254-20170916020411/@comment-24101790-20170916021215

Lol, you aren't very good at English (I didn't need to read this to know that given I've read your previous stories) or writing.

"... on our way to getting tore up." This is what you colloquialism (a word or phrase that is not formal or literary, typically one used in ordinary or familiar conversation.)

"I was just dawning on this realization" is essentially 'coming to this conclusion'. I hope you read some novels between now and responding to this to learn what stylistic writing means.

I encourage you to keep trying, and please keep trying to improve (as grasping at straws is pretty sad).