Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20181214071705/@comment-9041013-20181214144857

It's like you too the literal nightmare and just put it on paper. It's way too weird and flipping all over the place to work as it is at the moment. It's so flippy in fact that you've forgot to include "I" in one of your sentences rendering it awkward.

I can't say much about this as it is, because it's just all over the place and loses all effect when it starts going beyond the mind of a kid and into a nightmare of a conspiracy theorist.

Keep the "I am a robot" scenario and simply expand on that.

As much as I love The Killing Joke and Ledger's portrayal of the Joker, both of which include the notion that he knows something the rest of us don't. The Joker is so much more than that, The Joker is a force of nature, he is simply chaos incarnate.