Talk:The Very Last Step/@comment-26054278-20150720010850

This is a flawed, yet still excellent, ritual pasta.

I didn’t notice any errors or typos, which means that on a technical writing level, this story is perfect. The writing also has some humor and wit about it that made me have a lot more investment in the ritual itself than other, similar ritual pastas. I’d like to see this sort of style in more ritual pastas.

The pacing is rather decent as well. There is an introduction that piques the interest of the reader, enough time to explain the games, and then a conclusion there to deliver some creepiness.

If you can’t tell, this was relatively creepy for a ritual pasta. The idea of going to Hell is a disturbing one, even to me, a person who isn’t religious at all. Therefore, I love that last line.

The problem largely arose mainly with some of the games and the concept itself.

Other than the 1st game and the last game, the games were all things I had heard from other pastas and other media in general. As well written as they were, they felt rather uninspired and lacking originality.

For example, the mind being a sort of maze was used in both Gravity Falls and the recent Inside Out, just to name two off the top of my head. However, in those examples, despite being unoriginal, they pushed those ideas in new directions and did interesting things with them. Here, those games didn’t add much of anything new.

I will cut some slack by saying that those segments were not boring to read or anything, just lacking in comparison to everything else.

However, the concept here isn’t exactly the most creative either. Playing a game/games with the Devil? This is literally the plot of another ritual pasta, “The Devil Game”. Yes, that games are different, but still, it doesn’t come off as too original when there is a very popular ritual pasta with nearly the same concept.

Despite this lack of originality at times, everything else was done very well, with relatively not many other complaints. Well done. 85/100.