Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26502770-20150621191143/@comment-26502770-20150621193723

Whitix wrote: Wow, that's a big picture. Might want to make it a bit smaller.

Here's a little bit of advice: just because something actually happened to you, doesn't always mean it will translate well into a creepypasta. You probably have a more personal connection to the event that makes it more disturbing for you, but that effect is hard to replicate in story form. Would this be scary in real life? Hell yes. Is it scary as a creepypasta? Well, no.

This is far too short; you need build up to the spiders, but that's hard to do without using filler. You can't foreshadow the spiders in any way, so you can't really build up to the event or induce tension. I don't think this story will work as a creepypasta; keep it as a weird story to tell your friends.

And don't put yourself down by saying "sorry if it sucked." It won't earn you sympathy points and doesn't do much for your self esteem. The fact that you put your story here to learn how to improve your writing is a huge step in the right direction.

direction.

I didnt say that to gain sympathy and thank you for the adive and ill build the story up