Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37873341-20190808210100

To whom may read this id like some help and critsisms about my story. I'd like to know what to add or what to scrap from it if you'd like to read it's put down below

'''“Don’t open the door!” Your aunt calls out to you as you slowly waddle towards the door. You stop to look at her as she has the expression of extreme anger on her face. Scared, you back away from the door and go to watch the T.V. Your favorite show is on but your not paying attention as you see your uncle open the door and walk down a flight of wooden stairs. The door was left open and all you see is darkness. The picture of black stuck to your mind as your aunt picks you up and brings you to the crib. She seemed to be upset now instead of angry. “Was she ok?” you think to yourself as you slowly drift off to sleep. All you could dream of what was downstairs. In your kid mind you would never think anything bad, but you know it could be something scary but your curiosity gets the better of you. You wake up and find a way out of your crib. It was dark outside but some lights were on in the house and you approach the door once again.

You see a crack of the door was open and a dim light shone through from down the stairs. You pull the door open slowly and begin your descent down the long flight of stairs. You grip onto the railing tightly as to not fall down the stairs as you do one stair at a time. You finally make it to the bottom of what seemed to be the endless staircase. You look around but due to little light you cant make out anything. You decide to wander around until you bump into something hard and cold. You feel it all around it until you feel a button. You press the button as the machine began to move and start making loud creaking and grinding noises. You then hear someone open the door from upstairs as its your uncle. He rushes downstairs with something in his hands. He grunts and looks around and almost spots you. He goes back upstairs and slams the door.

The light seemed to get better as you see the machine still on, working and grinding. There was a smell, a bad smell that you can’t describe as you see the machine produce chunks of meat. “How is this thing doing that?” You think to yourself as you see a hand sink down into the machine. You see more of the meat being produced. You don’t understand what’s going on and you get very scared. You begin to cry and hear someone come down the stairs again. It’s both your aunt and uncle. They both have looks of anger as they turn off the machine and spot you. You try running but your aunt grabs you by the arm and grips it tightly. You kick, you scream you try everything to get away but its no use as they try to put you into the machine as well.

There was pounding on the door upstairs. Everything went silent as there was another bang at the door. Then there was a loud smash as the police break in through the windows and doors of the house. The search the house until they come downstairs to see them forcing you into the meat processor. They were forced to put you down and they were arrested for 3rd degree murder and kidnapping. You were put into the police car and driven off to be with your parents again. Your mom and dad were so happy to be reunited with you again. Your now 17 and the event happened 13 years ago you still wonder, what ever happened to your aunt and uncle. but then you slowly began to realize that your aunts house doesn’t have a basement nor does she have a husband.''' 