Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-7454797-20140609232032/@comment-7454797-20140611203704

Thanks for the feedback. I'm probably going to write the story in an abandoned asylum that a former government worked secretly revived-or something like that. Or maybe just a hospital, but i'll have to research the conditions and such. I'm also planning on her being somewhat okay with her imprisonment (since the hospitals/asylums probably treat children better) but once she has to stay with the adults she would start a riot/rebel)

Anyway, thanks for the advice. I'll definetely edit the story more than I did the character description too. I wasn't really focusing on word choice or anything while writing about Ariel since my idea's never stay long :P