Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26011836-20161210184326/@comment-26011836-20161211012043

First off, thank you for your feedback. I'll be correcting the grammatical errors you listed as soon as I can. In terms of changing the paragraph when a change of speaker occurs, how should it look? I've never done something like that before so I have no idea how to do that.

Second, the story takes place in a mostly abandoned hospital and abandoned buildings are great places for homeless people to take refuge. I based circus guy on an encounter I had a while back. You see, my mom and I were going to our car to put away our groceries and a guy in an orange sweatshirt and ratty sweatpants carrying a dog hoodie (the ones with the built in mittens) came over and asked us for directions to the train station. My mom (politely) told him to get lost and the last thing he said to us was "Don't let your kids join the circus." I have no idea what he meant by that but I assume he had some sort of mental issues or he was a member of the circus that disliked his job. I don't think the guy was aware of what was happening because his presumed mental illness might hinder him from being fully aware of his surroundings.