Talk:The Wizard from Jernsen/@comment-26298997-20190617060107

I like a lot of the imagery and ideas here. In my opinion this would have benefited from rethinking some of the dialogue to make it flow a bit better and from just going into things a little bit more. The entire story feels rushed and the narrator doesn't seem to make any particularly logical choices behave like  most people would. It's fine to have a character act strangely or even stupidly but you should establish that as part of their character. The bit about the cat being a shapeshifter and still killing people to this day feels very tacked on.