Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24982950-20160330211745/@comment-27905100-20160330225957

Okay. First off, I got chills. This has the makings of a great pasta, but the ending seems a bit anticlimactic. I know that this is a ritualpasta and all, but still. Add a catch other than the fact that you might lose. Something like every time you join a king to yourself you forfeit a piece of your soul or something like that.

Second, you just need to use your capitalization better. Plug it into a word document or something and use the grammar check.

Other than that, it's pretty great.