Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25731232-20141126224300/@comment-4883034-20141126225704

Well to start off, the whole "this story is true" thing at the beginning usually turns some readers away, so I'd ditch that if I were you. other than some work on syntax and such, I'd advise you to flesh out why she hated her twin and the abuse she recived a bit more, I didn't understand that much. And I might re-work then end If I were you, it doesn't seem at all like a conclusion, more like an unfinished bit.