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@Jay - My story "Vernian Marble" had a lot of exposition cut. Furthermore the story is in three distinct parts. The first details the town. The second details the mine. The third details the chasm within the mine. I could buff the first section and present it as an introduction to the town, and then split the second up to slot in before each story as brief intro, and the third could go in as it's own story/conclusion. The first section is from an IRS agent writing a memo before retirement - I cut a lot out where he basically tries to say "don't go there". I could easily have him say something along the lines of (the following is super truncated) "the town has a lot of stories. More than just my own. Here are some to help reinforce my point." I was hoping to get Elliot's feedback on what I wrote about the town but I wanted to create the idea that the place is not a fixed entity, and that sometimes some ideas conflict. I thought this would let me get a bit more specific (the image of the abandoned mine in the middle of large wheat fields stuck with me) without stepping on anyone's toes. Nonetheless it could also be suited to an introduction that let everyone take their own approach to the town e.g. architecture, climate, population, industry, social status etc.

@Frank Depending on the order I would be interested in using the lyrics to Johnny Cash's song as a way to roll from the intro into your story. But it's obviously all very dependent on various things. Either way though I will look into a way to integrate your ideas because I like the thread it creates between the two tales (plus Johnny Cash rocks and it's a great connection to be made).

Ultimately though I would like to avoid looking like I'm eagerly waiting on the side lines. I've thought a lot about my story's structure because of concerns about it's pacing and that has lead to me the realization it can be adapted to an intro if need be. But I am completely, 100%, happy to let anyone take the intro on, or if Elliot posts something to go with his. But, if people are busy with their own and Elliot would appreciate the extra time to work on his entry then I'd be content to change mine because I've finished two and am able to rearrange my other writing projects to revise it. Also if we do go with mine, I would like to retain Elliot as a co-author on the intro because I would appreciate his feedback and every idea would go through him for a veto to see if it didn't conform to his expectations or ideas.