Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29015383-20160712171950/@comment-29015383-20160714184354

You guys are all AMAZING for taking your time and giving me all this feedback. I've been here for like, 2 or 3 days now and I already love you lot.

I've made the suggested changes (and made the mentioned fixes). Looking back at it, every single edit has improved the story beyond the original so much, even if the changes themselves were overall fairly minor. The biggest really was that the GraciousHost does absolutely nothing to disguise his true identity now because hell, nobody believes it anyway and looks at it as a bit of acting/roleplay. Thank you again for that suggestion Christian.

Your mention of needing something to tie the Host's motives and his nature together really helped too. In the end it was really only a small addition where the Host comments that he loves how the internet is basically one big catalogue of humans for him, but it I feel it really adds to tying the story and the ending together.

Empy, thank you too for pointing out that awkward sentence and prompting me to fix it. It really didn't flow that well before and the paragraph feels a lot better now.

I have once again editted the story above to reflect it's current state. If no more problems/issues pop up, I'm going to tie a ribbon around it and post it (please don't hit that delete button then, Empy. I know it will be oh so very tempting, but you must resist!)