Talk:Human Experiment Chamber/@comment-25941663-20150613174020

This was very well written. The story flowed nicely and had good pace. Wording and grammar was perfect too.

Character development was excellent. I liked how you didn't tell us everything about Syton, you left part of him a mystery, something that you handled superbly.

I would have liked to see though some more human interaction with the subjects. It would be good to know a bit more about them. Right now, the torture scenes are a bit hollow, as we don't know about the human side of the subjects.

The way Syton was reacting to the torturing was handled very well too. It was most of the times subtle and it felt real.

The scene where the blonde escaped and went to warn Syton was very creepy. Well done there. It honestly creeped me out.

One of the problems with the pasta is that Syton dies at the end, but the story is written in first person. This was a bit weird.

Overall, this was a well written pasta and an enjoyable read. I'm interested to see what you've come up with in the sequels, as I think the story here is more or less finished.