Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24776950-20170412003723/@comment-28060931-20170413212808

You shouldn't be asking people to do the work for you; the workshop is to help you improve your writing, not to do it for you. We're not here to teach you to wipe your own ass, we're here to help you learn new skills and techniques of wiping. And if my metaphor hasn't scared you far off this wiki already then here's some advice. If "sow" is your characters name, then, firstly, capitalize it, and, secondly, try to change it to something that doesn't sound like another English word.

"He had just sat down", would sound better if you said "He sat down." I noticed the whole story was chalk full of bloated senteces. Go through it with a fine-toothed comb and pick out any errors, grammatical or just for the sake of better flow or prose, and fix them; editing is annoying job but stories are shit without it, and your story seems to be written in fifteen minutes and just posted here. I could go through the story and annotate every single mistake but we both will benefit if I don't have to do that. You need to learn how to edit and I have better things to do than put a hundred and fifty notes on a micropasta.

I'll go into plot, the technical,the characters, and so on if you decide to fix the basic grammar issues. I'll put in the proper work to review this when you put in proper work to fix the basic mistakes. Other than that, I wish you luck with your story and your writing. Have a nice day, mate.