Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27820006-20160219044556/@comment-25941663-20160219220048

I'm sorry but this can't be fixed.

Ritual-pastas very rarely work and this is no exception. On top of that, this ritual has no point. Why would anyone attempt it? There's nothing to be gained.

I didn't noticed any glaring technical issues (grammar, punctuation etc.) though, so with practise you can come up with something good. I suggest you read some more good stories around here to get a gist of how things work. Also, read these Blogs. They'll help you a lot.

Happy writings!