Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33488654-20180822020522/@comment-26444017-20180822041218

What you currently have is an outline, a skeleton. Put some meat on those bones. Don't be afraid to make it longer. Add detail. Include conversations if you think they'll help push the story forward. In particular, when Cooper returns as a monster, be descriptive.

I'm not sure if vanishing into a puff of smoke when exposed to light is the best way to go. This is really up to you, though.

Provide some explanation as to how Cooper turned into the monster. Currently, there isn't any. Even if you leave it vague, give the reader something to think about, or some reason why that would happen.

Also, don't let the above criticism get you down. Everyone has a first story, and pretty much none of them are good. That's why we're here; to help make them better, or point our new authors in the right direction.