Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20181023000626/@comment-9041013-20181023235110

So this is one of those, I have a general madness like The Joker without any of the good, "fun", qualities of The Joker? You can't give us a very solid idea and just ask us to go be like, "This is very abstract... Makes me think... hmmm... Good Job, mate."

What does this guy have? He has an issue... what it is, once you figure it out, you can make the character make actual sense, make it interesting rather than confusing and dry. Daniel is delusional, but he doesn't display any other signs of any mental illness that causes delusion, does he have some neurological abnormality? Who knows... he's just having delusions of grandieur for no reason! Buy into that!

Also, some "wack" doctor who thinks experimentation on "insane" people is a good idea... Why is this there? What's the point? I'm not scared of doctors and this isn't something that's going to make me fear them... why? because these "bad" doctors while do exist are AWFULLY RARE in reality and this doesn't bother me at all, as I've mentioned, reading The Wave was more thrilling because it actually applies to a real possibility.

Honestly, I'm just not feeling this.