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Today on the evening news on a local channel in Houston showed that a woman was killed in nearby Huntsville. The odd thing about the crime was that the victim was missing her heart and kidneys. The wall next to the victim had “Nighty-night” written in blood with a symbol of a circle and an “x” below the saying.

4 months ago

Raven, a fourteen year old girl with long dark hair and dark eyes was on her way to school. She was on the bus then a boy behind her was yanking her hair calling her names that really insulted her. Later that day she was in her room by herself then a small voice in her head started to comfort her telling her that kid was going to die tonight. She smiled to herself knowing that the boy was going to be punished.

Later that night she put on a crop top with a hunter green jacket with her black pants rolled up. She was in her bathroom with a pair of scissors cutting her hair to a bob with bangs over her right eye and barely touching her collarbone. She left her house with a scalpel in her hands.

She knew where the kid lives so she walked a short distance to that house. She walked around the house till she found an open door or window, but an open window lead directly to the boy’s parents. Instead of thinking of this as if they were in the way, she thought of this as a good thing. While they were sleeping she cupped her hand on the mother’s mouth and slit her throat, for she did the same to the father. She started to giggle as she was enjoying this. She left the room to find the kid. She walked for a while till she found the kitchen. The voice told her to get a bigger knife, so she rummaged though a drawer. She pulled out a knife and saw the reflection of herself; she stared at herself as she noticed that eyes shrunk very small. Raven put down her knife and started to sob.” Why am I doing this?” she told herself.”Because you wanted revenge” a voice replied; Raven turned around to see no one around her, but she knew that she was alone other than that kid, The voice told raven that it was her that said that, so she believe the voice and continued on. She went to the kid’s room and opened the door. She peeked inside and saw the boy sleeping like he’s in peace, well that’s not going to last long, she thought to herself. She stepped inside the room, but her foot makes a creaking sound on the wooden floor. Raven started to curse herself but she saw a flashlight beam on her. She looked up to see the kid staring at her with horror. She smiled then said,” you know what’s a real pity was that you pulled my hair and that really hurt me,” She pouted then she looked at her knife and said “I’m just here to return the favor.” The kid got up from his bed and took off running to his parent’s room. Raven thought this was amusing so she let him go. She ran after him putting her knife against the wall to make a scratching noise. The kid ran till he got to his parent’s room and he stopped to see that his parents are dead. He stared at his mother and father with horror. Raven caught up with him; she smiled when she knew that the boy was scared then she said” You did took something from me that was precious to me.” the boy looked at Raven terrified as she came face to face with him then she said “Your mother never let you stay up this late, Yes? So I’m going to do her a favor, Nighty-night!” She brought down her knife and stabbed the kid in his heart. She threw her head back and laughed then said “Aw, that didn’t last long. I was hoping that it would last a long time, it was fun though”

She walked around the house then her stomach growled, so she patted her abdomen and said,” I wonder if they have anything in the kitchen. She walked towards the kitchen then she heard a loud scream so she put her hands on her ears and dropped on her knees. The voice urged her to eat the bodies. Raven was yelling no, so the voice sent another scream. Raven finally gave up so she stood up and walked towards the room with all the bodies in it. The voice started to chant “Do it” louder and louder till she couldn’t stand it. She stood in front of the small boy and took her scalpel and started at his throat and to his waist; blood got her hands but she didn’t care. She opened his rib cage and took his heart; she stared at it for a while then she took a bite. It tasted really bitter; then the aftertaste was tolerated. Instead of gagging of her actions she continued on what she’s doing. She took her hands and shoved it further inside the kid’s body; she located the kid’s kidneys. She threw away the intestines and took both kidneys and bite into them. She thought they were the best part of the bodies other than their hearts. Raven did the same to both parents then she left the house satisfied.

The next day raven was in school, but instead of the usual routine of school, everyone was talking about last night’s incident. Because Raven smiled all day than usual, everyone was questioning her. Later in the evening her mother felt uneasy because Raven’s father was storming around the house smashing everything. Raven always hated this man for what he did to her mother; He would always boss her mother and called her names. Raven did everything she could to protect her mother. One day Raven made a mistake of taking one hundred dollars from her father’s wallet to pay a night in a hotel for her mom, for after they returned Raven` s father smacked her mother` s face with the back of his hand. All these memories came back to her as her father was yelling at her mom telling her that he wanted pizza instead of steak. That fool, does he know what my mom is doing for him all these years, she thought to herself.

Later that night Raven got up from her bed and put the same clothes she wore last night. She went to see her father on the couch watching television. She went behind him and said, “All these years which my mother had to put with you, we never liked you, you filthy Bastard! Nighty-night! “She brought down her knife to his chest and she pulled her knife down to his waist. Her mother came in to she what Raven was screaming about. She gasped as she saw Raven covered in blood, and then she let out a loud shriek as she noticed that her husband was dead on the couch. She stared at Raven with horror as she said, “Mommy, you wanted this, yes? We could leave right now and be happy.” Raven smiled to her mother. Her mother started to stuttered,”Y-y-yes we could, let me pack our bags.” She quickly left the room, so Raven followed her and stopped when she noticed that her mother was actually dialing Nine-one-one on her, but before she could finish Raven said.” Mommy you said that we’re leaving, yes? Why are you lying? Look what I did for you!” She gestured towards her father’s dead body. Tears started to stream down her face as the voice told that her mother didn’t appreciate what she did.” Mommy, I thought I would never say this to you but, Nighty-night!” She brought down her knife to her mother’s chest. Raven dropped to her knees and started to sob and cried “Why mommy? Why did you lie to me?” she stroked her mother’s cheek” We could have been happy.” she said in a shaken voice.

She left the house with her knife and fled to her friend’s house. She knocked on the door and her friend answered the door; she was surprised to see raven this late. “Raven you’re coved in blood, what happened?” Raven looked down at her clothes and said,” my father kicked me out the house; my mom is calming things down, can I spend the night till every thing is settle?” Her friend looked at her for a while till she said sure. But later Raven explained everything to her friend and came inside and asks if she wash her clothes in the bathroom. Later that night the voice told her she could stay this one night and she shouldn’t trust her friend. Raven listened for awhile but most of the time she ignored the voice then she finally drifted off to sleep.

The next day Raven was in school then she was called to the office. She walked towards the office but little did she know that the police was waiting for her. When she step foot in the office they asked her to follow them to the police car. Raven had this feeling inside her that she was going to jail, but she wasn’t sacred at all; but instead of being scared, she felt glad of what she did. But instead of taking her to jail they took her to a mental institution nearby to talk to a psychiatrist about her loss. She smiled to herself because that they don’t know that she was the one that killed them.

Raven sat in a chair surrounded by books about everything about the human mind. Well not everything, she thought.

“Hello Miss Destiny, I heard about your lost, I’m very sorry” a woman in a dress with a clipboard said. Raven gritted her teeth because that’s was her real name but everyone called her Raven, for that her hair was dark as a raven’s wing. “Would you mind telling your full mane?” The lady said. She paused for a moment then quickly said “Oh my apologies, I’m Dr. Smith”

“Raven Smith” Raven said through clenched teeth as she was mocking the doctor.

“Your full name” Dr. Smith said in a stern voice.

Raven huffed and said,” Destiny Jeda Vidnas”

“Good, now we’re making progress, your birthday”.

“December the fifth two thousand”

“When was the last time you saw your parents?”

Raven looked down for a while thinking about when she killed her mother. That moment was the hardest thing she had to face. She thought about how much she loved her mother and she always try to look after her but after she lied she had to kill her.

“Miss Destiny?"

“Huh? Oh, after my father started to yell at my mom, she told me to leave the house and I heard a bunch of arguing so I ran to a friend’s house and ask if I could spend the night.”

“But your friend said that you where covered in blood.”

“Yeah, my father was in rage so he grabbed a knife and stabbed my mother multiple times and I ran towards her and she was bleeding badly, so I attacked him.”

“You could’ve called the police, you know?”

“I had so much anger that I lost control and I was upset that he killed my mom!” Raven shrieked for that half of that was true.

“Ok one more question, your father was missing his heart, you know why?”

Raven looked down for a while to think she didn’t want to tell her that she ate it so instead she said,” I thought my father was a heartless  person so I took his heart and said, you don’t deserve this you bastard.”

The doctor looked at her for a while then said,” Well, that is all I need to hear. Thank you Miss Destiny.”

Two nurses came in with a straight jacket and they started put it on her but she said, “Wait, what’s going on?” The doctor turned around and said, “Oh, this is just nothing sweetie, we are going to put you in a room, you cannibal.” She said the last part with disgust. “How did you know?” Raven said though her clenched teeth. “Well why don’t you ask your friend” She made a gesture towards a shadow and her friend appeared. The voice screamed,” I knew we shouldn’t trusted her” Raven glared at her then said,” you traitor, I’m going to kill you.” The girl looked away. The nurses started to escort Raven to a room with white walls and there is only one door which had several locks. Raven sat in the room and waited; every once and a while the door would open and a nurse would bring in pills, and every time she took one she would feel light-headed but it was like food to her. She laughed knowing that one day she would kill that lady and the girl.

Three months later

Raven was still in a straight jacket and still in the room. But one day Raven didn’t know that girl was trying to help her escape. Raven was in the room waiting for the day to end but she heard an unusual click of the door, for that she learned to count time because there was no clock in the room. The door opened and the girl was standing there with Raven’s belongings. ”Hey, I know that you’re mad but I’m trying to help.” Raven glared at her for a while till she said,”fine, get me out of this thing.” The voice told her that they are going to kill her later. The girl led Raven out of the building, but behind them the sirens blared out”#9785 has escaped; I repeat # 9785 has escaped.” Raven laughed as she knew she has a new name, #9785. “This is as far I can take you,good luck Raven” the girl planted a kiss on Raven’s cheek but she just glared at her and ran towards the woods.

Later that day, Raven went to her friend’s house, but she didn’t know that the doctor was the girl’s mother. She knew that the girl always kept her window open when Raven runs away from her father ,she could always came inside, but this time the window was locked. You bitch, Raven thought. She walked around the house; to her surprise she found a window open. She opened the window and saw the doctor sleeping in bed. Ha! Now this is awesome, two kills in one night! Raven thought. She went inside and said,” you know doctor, I hate it when I say I’m fine and you people think I’m denying everything, but that’s the only problem I have, but this time I think I can solve it.” The doctor woke up immediately and she stared at Raven in horror as Raven smiled at her and again her eyes shrunk.” I do have one thing to tell you, Nighty- night!” She brought down her knife but the doctor was fast so she stabbed her shoulder instead. “Aw, I wanted you to die fast.” Raven made a pouty face, and then she smiled,” But oh well, this would be fun.” She jumped on the doctor and stabbed her multiple times but she was still alive, the doctor started to scream,” Run Vanessa!” Raven giggled and said,” it’s too late.” She stabbed the doctor the last time and she stopped moving and stared towards Vanessa’s room with horror in her eyes.” well that was fun.” Raven said in sing-song voice. She walked towards her room and opened the door.” Vanessa?” Raven whispered. “Hey Raven, you’re not to suppose to be here.” Vanessa looked at Raven with worry. ”Its ok, your mom is asleep.” forever, Raven thought. Raven brought her knife above her head and said,” you betrayed me, so I’m here to return the favor, Nighty-night.” She brought the knife down but Vanessa dodged it and jumped on Raven screaming and clawing her but Raven has the advantage of having a knife so Raven slashed Vanessa in her arm. Vanessa fell backwards but she took Raven’s knife, and she jumped on her and swung the knife till she cut Raven’s right eye. Raven clutched her eye screaming,” You Bitch!” Raven plucked the knife away from her and stabbed her in her chest. Vanessa let out a scream and her head rolled back. Raven threw her head back and laughed till her sides hurt; she smiled then said,” now, that was fun, but it was a workout, I’m not going to eat tonight though.” She pulled the knife out of Vanessa’s chest and left the house.

Raven was whistling and walking down the street till is heard the sirens. Right on cue, Raven thought. She ran to the woods and found herself a stump to sit on. Her right eye started to bleed worse “Damn it.” Raven started to curse herself but she wiped the blood off her face and clean it. She couldn’t see out of it. She sat there for a long time.” I wonder, everyone will know me but I want them to know me by a different name.” She sat there for a long time till she thought of a good name. ”I got it, Nightwing or night for short, I like it, it suits my hair color and my saying, nighty-night.”

Raven sat there thinking of the name; then she felt a breeze on the back of her neck; she around but she saw nothing. She shrugged her shoulders and turned only to be face to face with a faceless, tall, and formally dressed man. He kept moving closer towards her till she was overwhelmed with white Then everything went black. 