Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20181105182854/@comment-25458443-20181112051226

BloodySpghetti wrote: So it's like a contemporary pop song;four and a half sentences without any meaning, reason or rhyme. What is the actual point of this?! It's not creepy or scary, more like irritating to read. A pointless loop of a few sentenses that are kind of supposed to be phrased differently.

The tenses and possessive cases are off at points

What is he even meant?! It's already been uploaded, but I'll try to address your comments here.

There are quite a lot of sentences, actually, and I tried to initiate some sort of structure or progression in when new ones show up, but oh well. If the idea of a story that repeats several sentences over and over again isn't your cup of tea, there's no implementation in the world that could please you. I'd prefer not to get all pretentious and explain away why I did what or what the reason for what was, but I didn't just get up and go 'hm here's an arbitrary list of sentences I guess I'll just throw them onto a page!'

What's the point of this? I already said I'd rather not get into explaining it, but I'll at least say that I was creeped out by it. What's scary is subjective, and I think it's weird to say something isn't worth your time because it wasn't scary. Unless you're just looking for something to scare you, but in that case I just wish you wouldn't say it wasn't worth anyone's time.

"Supposed to be phrased differently?" By what metric? I phrased them like I did for a reason!