Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20140713012004/@comment-24966786-20140713115912

The story grammar and everything else is fine, however you need to add more on to it yes it is creepy to be stalked by something but that's really all this thing does, perhaps add more of a scare factor like causing nightmares, long sleepless nights stuff like that. This is a good start however but it just needs more story.