Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3508932-20140506130014/@comment-24859608-20140506132030

Although it wasn't scary, it was an awesome story. Your sentences are short, but they have perfect grammar and spelling. It is a truly meaningful story.

Aside from that, you have so much potential to make this story scarier, like A LOT scarier, and it wouldn't be that hard to do so. One thing you should do is take out the last paragraph. Go right from "It has been over five years now", to "She was lovely". This leaves the reader hanging to give it a nice little creepy to it.

If you are not trying to make it creepy or scary, then maybe this is not the place to post a story, but if you find the right place, then I am sure you will get praised.

Other than that, you had me hooked from beggining to end....

Bravo.