Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26447851-20160705140237/@comment-25024572-20160721150041

Based on what I saw, it wasn't the worst thing ever, but there were still some problems.

For example, dialogue. Dialogue is written in quotation marks. For example:

"You know, dialogue is written in quotation marks, right?" Dorkpool asked.

"Really?" Eyelessjack1080 responded. "How fascinating!"

Second, there wasn't all that much characterization, especially in regards to the Creepypasta characters. They were really only mentioned. Keep in mind, you wrote: I ended up giving the residents of the mansion so much personality and depth that they started to sound like they were the family from "the following". So...yeah. Weird.

There was a lot of good. The main character is a bit of a smartass, which is nice. And at least there's a reason behind why the guards were morons (though why they didn't lock the main character in is not explained, if I remember correctly). Honestly, this could be pretty good.