Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36516240-20180829161047/@comment-24101790-20180829162950

I'm sorry, but there really isn't a lot of plot here. What plot there is on the video is pretty generic (OC vehicle) and the text repeats a lot of the errors present in your other stories (improper capitalization, typos, awkward wording, and a rushed plot) that were deleted for being below quality standards.

I would suggest using a word doc to write out your story so you can spend some time working on the plot and correct all the mechanical and plot issues throughout the story.