Talk:School Event/@comment-26605596-20150712203219

Okay so apparently you used to have another paragraph and now you don't? I feel like it needs an end, because it definitely doesn't have one. If you don't like what you wrote the first time, write something else. The story is great and I really like it, but I want more. You could write several more paragraphs about what he sees in the carnival. Creepy carny-themed death scenes for the 3 missing kids? You gotta give us more! As it is, 8/10.