Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25900635-20141221231439/@comment-26507180-20141226123100

Like, though I do find it a bit unbelievable for the main character to think in terms of 'experiments'. He and his family are sure to have poor education, as they are not rich enough to live inside the city's walls.

On the lay-out, I don't think you need indentions, as you leave blank lines to seperate paragraphs.