Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25242831-20140730050315/@comment-24918243-20140730164002

First off: wall of text.

Second: Mentioning Slenderman, JtK, Eyeless Jack will get you on the sights of the auto filter.

Besides those 2 major points there is the fact that you start the story like if you are talking to the victims and end it like if you were talking to the killer. That's confusing.

The Vapour character also seems to be just as bad as the people he goes after, but since he only goes after those creepypasta villians, there is no reason for me, or any other reader to be scared of him. Stories about "avenging angels" can work but in this case I think it pretty much fell flat.