Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37041992-20181004223948/@comment-9041013-20181005100047

Well so did the narrator got flayed? If so... they could not have survived reaching the hospital. Shock would've ended them.

If they didn't get flayed, what happened? I don't get it.

Also, you need to fix your English all over the story, you've just used a bunch of words for the sake of a word count, most of the first paragraph is just stalling for example. I don't. Care. He. Is. Afraid. Of. The. Dark. So. Very. Much. See what I mean? this "minute, five, ten" thing is really really useless. For example.

Technically speaking, the whole thing needs re-writing.

Plotwise, you just need to elaborate a little on the encounter and clarify what you mean by "I was sculpted"

I did like the bad guy though, he was pretty decent and somewhat original.