Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180724081137/@comment-9041013-20180727195043

DrBobSmith wrote: Venting where? If you can have establish it as venting to his last true friend, his vodka bottle, then you may be able to do it.

As long as you can establish an atmosphere that is reasonable and keep us there. The problem is that you didn't have either atmosphere. We didn't feel a confession and we didn't feel prayer. What can you make us feel and smell?

If we can't feel that angst, it is just some combat experience story. You get disembowelment points but such a story is the present tense tale of the guy who is enjoying the experience. Well honestly, first time sharing is at this point somewhat overrated for me, we've seen hundreds of "It's the first time I'm telling anyone this..." So let's take it a notch further, it's one of countless times he tells this story, if he manages to tell the story, he doesnt have to break down into tears.

That's how it works... I know people who suffer from ptsd

Puting some real life emotion got me a spasming shoulder. Ffs.