Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25361316-20141108230948/@comment-25226524-20141108234703

Well it's hard to say why it was deleted. It could be due to the writing style, which I realize is intentional, but if they just skimmed it, they could've just thought you were a child trying to write a story. The other reason could be that this type of story is very common these days, and I could also see it coming from pretty much the opening sentence.

There is also these two paragraphs that are unfinished thoughts. I realize it was likely intentional, but this could've added to the admin thinking this wasn't up to standards:

I like to paint the dolls. The paints you buy in stores are mostly fleshtones but sometimes I like to use my creativity and apply a little bit of red or blue or lime green to my dolls. You might have a very curious picture in your head of what those dollies look like. Rest assured, they are very pretty. I always coordinate my paints with the outfits I pick. I never

they never gave me dollys because I always broke them, I always broke the dolls the last doll I had when I was a boy they took away from me because they were scared I would break it and I screamed and screamed and scre

I don't know if you used that large, bold font, that you have at the opening and ending, in your original version, but that would've hurt your chances as well. You can use bold and italics when it's called for, but no outside font style/size. To avoid this, always paste your story in source mode (it removes all font codes).

All in all, I think this story probably could be reinstated if you explained yourself to an admin. I would say that one, or a combination of those reasons likely apply. The predictability of this is what really hurts it, and that may be enough to keep it from being cleared. You're definitely a good writer, as I really enjoyed your other story, but this one just didn't really work out for me. Hope this helps, keep writing.