Talk:The Pale Emperor Gave Me Life Advice/@comment-36393004-20181123210031/@comment-36393004-20181123213647

Ok, I finished reading the story and the rest of it his riddled with the same mispellings and grammar issues. This seems rushed so please go back and look it over. It is a good story. Two things I want to point out specifically though.

1. "Death’s words sent a cold chill down my spine, there were multiple universes… There were biological species that are capable of meddling with the fabric of reality itself… And we were being proud of flying to the Moon… Christ… we are really nothing but microbes in a Petri dish." - That's a lot of elipses and you used them far more than I would expect from you. I don't mind them in quotes from characters but this just doesn't sound good.

2. At first you said the car was travelling between planes, which is why it could travel so quickly but then they impede the travel of a vehicle that gets mad at them? I was confused by that.