Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33937557-20180617200122/@comment-33937557-20180618000744

DrBobSmith wrote: SoDaft Potato,

I would also seriously consider whether it is more horrible for the brother to be dead or still alive, just missing fingers, ears, eyes, lips, nose, cheeks, an arm, toes, etc. Consider the horrible fight the parents would have to drive off the rats - and as parents you know they would do it even after being bit themselves. Consider the horror, remorse and resentments the protagonist has every time he looks at the brother he made made into a monster. That does sound, like, really terrible, but I'm not quite sure how I'd feel about making it longer...

(Excuse like. Just there for effect.)