Talk:Stubb's Clubhouse/@comment-4470175-20160802012904

I think you managed to create a genuinely scary story. I like the concept, even if it could be considered a tad unoriginal 'a bit reminiscent of 1999' but I liked the twist of everything happening live. It is also very well written, so props for that. The only criticism I can think of is that there are slight inconsistencies in the story - this may lead to the reader finding the plot seemingly convoluted. This is a small criticism however.

7/10