Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25907694-20150303002302/@comment-24976741-20150303011546

To be quite honest I have no idea what to think, the story itself felt, "off" to me. I find it was rushed like you said, but see where you're coming from only while listening to the song. The story tries to present a certain emotion that only a song, or at least accompanied by a song can it present. Although the story seemed to have no plot, one might say it had many plots of what the girl went through with a sudden realization of what the song brought to her.

Interesting concept, still needs much work though. The story could be said to be fragmented and ridged in certain areas. Not exactly my cup of tea, but I hope this may help you in some way. I recommend you gather your thoughts and feelings about this a little more and every now and than work on the story a little at a time.

Oh ya, just my opinion, but when trying to switch over to the hospital area try doing it in a way of an after image of a mirror/reflection or breaking through glass. IDK I just thought that may sound cool, good luck.