Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10869901-20140523042158/@comment-24918243-20140523153103

I'm not going to get into the formatting issues and random links, since I think that has already been covered already.

But I have to agree with Resident and Empyreal about the plot points. Here you have this teenager who gets a knife (if it was cursed we have no idea since you never even alluded to the fact that it might) and goes on a non-stop killing spree out of nowhere.

He guts a dog, does some sidewalk graffiti with it's innards and does not get a drop of blood on him clothing. Later, he stabs (without gutting) a family and has so much blood on him the he decides to clean himself before going home.

Then he wonders in a house, kills the whole family like if he was a hunting knife wielding ninja including a full grown man who apparently was unable to put up a fight with a 14 year old kid.

Then he goes home, kills his parents using the same ninja skills he used before. Not very believable.

Last but not least, never start a story giving a profile description of the character. It smacks of amateurism. If you can't weave that into the story then just leave it out. Especially things like height ,unless there is some HUGE relevance to the story, no one cares.

At the risk of sounding harsh, I would say it's a back to the drawing board with this one.