Talk:The Witch's Tunnel/@comment-27012445-20171105133045

there is some potential here, but there are some problem too. With a bit more work it could easily be resolved. First, there is no motivation for the main character to do anything, ie go into the forest, follow the crow, etc. The biggest disappoint is that there are no consequences for failure...well consequences that are interesting.

You do add some flavor to the story with plenty of well-placed descriptions of the environment, but they tend to come off and a bit simple and cheesy taking away from any sense of tension you are trying to build. For example, trees with clasping hands is a good description but don't quite work for this story and tend to come across as a bit silly.

In these type of stories, you need three things: a reason for the character to attempt the ritual, some weird and freaky shit required by the ritual, and a truly dangerous menace or trial the character must overcome.

I'd work on your descriptions first and make them unnerving and unsettling instead of simple and predictable. LIke for example "In the oldest part of the forest, a pathway can be seen, formed from the twisted and contorted limbs of the ancient and gnarled trees that rule this place." or something along those lines