Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3580198-20140728185527

Hello dudes. I'm a new guy here. I've always wanted to write my first creepypasta, and my I just made one. Unfortunately I accidentally made a page out of it instead of visiting you guys for some advices. The page is entitled Surviving Typhoon Haiyan and I just want some feedback about it. Good or bad, tell me about it :) 