Talk:Botched Exorcism/@comment-24229645-20140722180549

Interesting story, with a good concept that might have benefitted from a bit of background to lay the foundation for the events depicted. I suggest brushing up on how to distinguish between characters better than jumping from "the blond" (which should only have an "e" at the end if it refers to a woman, but it seems to refer to the boy, Jason, here), "the redhead," etc. The hair colors didn't give the reader a frame of reference indicating each character's place in the story, which was confusing and detracted from the events.