Talk:Foryeti Me Not/@comment-26007602-20151210064730

I'm usually not a fan of cryptid type stories, but I was pleasantly surprised by the monster's design. The tendrils in particular gave a bit of life to the boring old monster. It had a good, if not abrupt, ending, but I feel it fits the style of the story nicely.

Some criticism: sometimes the writing doesn't reflect the events that take place. There's no indication that Ned was clawed in the back until the others mention it. This wouldn't be a problem, but the scene where it presumably happens gives no indication of the beast that did this to him. Am I making sense with that? The fact that the story doesn't say something along the lines of, "The two men noticed the strange claw mark on his back" seems strange, as they just announce it without any prior indication. I hope I'm making that clear.

The only other thing that bothered me was the marijuana scene. Why's it in there? It creates some tension among the characters, but doesn't really affect the story in any way beyond padding. I don't think it really adds any depth to the characters, nor does it really help define them. It gives a bit of backstory, but I'm more interested in the current situation and environment than Orwell's family.

But what really matters is the Yeti, and he's well implemented. Great introduction, and while the action moves a bit quick, he gets a good share of screen time. So, I think overall, it's a decent story, with a unique setting and monster.