Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20170129121545/@comment-25947144-20170129152225

Well, semicolons are used to bond two independent clauses. You usually want to do that when they are related and want to contrast them. You, however, seem to use them nearly as often as commas. When you are about to add a semicolon, look at the sentence and decide if it is really necessary. If you don't need to contrast the statements or they aren't independent, don't add them.

One place were the writing feels very awkward to me is here: "Heading South-East, of the intended path included a small rural town, the locals had prepared themselves for this strange phenomenon, as they've received news about it earlier from other neighboring communities."

The sentence is not only run-on (which happens quite a few times) but it's also structured very strangely. What exactly included a small rural town? What's the subject? Also, most paragraphs are pretty short and creates the opposite problem of the semicolons: the last sentence of a paragraph and the first sentence of a second one are often very related, but separated.

Also, another mistakes I've just noticed: "shaking the oaks violently and covering it (them)"; "inhabiting there, (remove the comma) have never"; "troubling issues at mind., (remove the period) it".