Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31211829-20170202130739/@comment-31111342-20170202132853

For a rookie writer, this isn't a bad start at all. There are grammar errors in several places, but I'll give someone else the honor of pointing then out. I'm here to review the story.

I did enjoy it, but the ending does confuse me. However, it's the kind of confusion that can be almost expected in horror writing, in the mind screw way. I say clean up the grammar mistakes, and if Jackson was also a ghost have some more foreshadowing. Otherwise it just looks like he's completely insane. And I'm curious what he actually looks like so I can know how wrong the other descriptions of him were. I'm curious to know if Sally even fully remembers what he looked like.