Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29969337-20161104130817/@comment-29969337-20161114131614

Hi Mr Dupin, and thanks so much for taking the time to give me such a detailed and constructive response. I do think I will attempt to rework the story and especially liked your fantastic idea about incorporating the belt as a part of the torture earlier to foreshadow its later on. I will see what I can do and, hopefully, the next draft will address your criticisms satisfactorily MisterStuff (talk) 13:16, November 14, 2016 (UTC)