Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20140904164608/@comment-24381191-20140906160847

EmpyrealInvective wrote: I enjoyed the read, I think it could use a little fleshing out and explanation about what is exactly happening to the earth. (Additionally if you're looking to make the story a bit longer, you could delve a little more into the character and his emotional state.)

Not sure if "Pitiful; pathetic." constitutes a complete sentence and you misspelled piece ("peice"). Other than that, I don't see any real grammatical, spelling, or capitalization errors.

In my opinion, this story is up to quality standards and can be posted anytime you'd like. My only recommendation would be to make some minor edits to the aforementioned issues listed above. Thanks for the read and your advice. I thought you would have gotten that Earth is exploding/falling apart. I didn't give any background for that because of two reasons: 1. I have no rational explanation for that OR any of the events happening in this story. 2. I think it would be better if the reader filled in the blanks as Bethrebel said earlier. Also, which one of the titles mentioned above do you like?