Talk:Pale and Afraid/@comment-25246956-20140803012209

Well written. I was waiting for something really scary to happen, and then you caught me off guard with the ending. It was nice to see something different and I was still creeped out with the build up during the kids perspective. My one complaint is that your story has the Browns being a good football team playing in the superbowl. That took down the realistic factor of your story very much =) lol