Talk:Cloud Beneath the Sun/@comment-5306249-20200221033513

I am a bit of a layman in terms of poetry despite writing my own. With that said I was thoroughly pleased with the rhyme scheme and the tactile sensation of simple words. Thematically it definitely meets the quota of the Sun, but falls slightly short in terms of overall meaning/significance. I think using a child as the subject of curiosity was a good choice to provide that sense of mystique and wonder about the Sun, and some subtle fear.

However that small bit of fear partially comes from preconceived notions about why the Sun might be scary in any other context, and as such any influence of horror on the poem is lost in the author's original intent. And yet, it was invariably a very pretty and uplifting break from the darker entries thus far.

Style: 5/5 Horror: 2/5 Entertainment: 3/5 Theme: 4/5

Total: 14/20