Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26248899-20150618054314/@comment-26326346-20150620203831

In the last sentence of the fifth paragraph from the end: "it is probable that the victim had little to no strength to fend of his assailant."

Of should be off.

That was the only error I saw. I like the story, because we don't know for sure what happened. Was it a demon, his roommate, or did he go bonkers and  is responsible for his roommate's disappearance?

Your idea of doing the audio recordings is a very sweet idea. Maybe you could record yourself and play the role of "Night Owl" by recreating the videos in addition?

It's a sweet pasta, I don't have any gripes about it or ideas on improving it. Good Job :)