Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20180410032524/@comment-9041013-20180410094629

While I do think this is somewhat perfect the way it is, I wouldn't mind a few extra paragraphs. Perhaps somehow get the neighbor involved in the household for just a moment to foreshadow something or something of the sorts.

It reminds me of "Lightning" which was more powerful because the pedophile was in the kid's closet apparently.

Also, you've misspelled "liked the cartoon", I mean, one cannot "lick cartoons" and all that.