Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180821164405/@comment-36393004-20180822133213

This seemed to work much better. The only thing that I think needs addressing is how he arrives at the house as if he doesn't know where he is but somehow knows who is behind the door. Who is 'she' and how does he know 'her'. That kind of confused me. I am assuming it's a girlfriend or maybe an ex but if that was true he would instantly know the house when he arrived.