Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31424920-20180912211450/@comment-35711173-20180914025144

StarlessandBibleBlack,

The difference between what I am suggesting and what you have may be only a couple of paragraphs. I know we are in an investigation, but what makes it an unusual one? What makes it a creepy one? There must be an "Aha" moment where the investigating officer realizes that this is very much not a generic sociopathic rapist at work. What if the Nick gets a message over his radio at the end of the scene to call the coroner's officer about the cause of death. It's something urgent and plainly something they don't want to say over the radio where newspaper reporters might be listening.

It's your story. Do as you feel best.

Dr. Bob