Talk:I Need to Stop the Knocking/@comment-29502200-20160903232907/@comment-24101790-20160904000805

The issue is that those statements come off as not really being metaphorical or poetic, but more like they don't really make sense contextually in the story. It would be like describing a picture as deafening or a sound as blinding, without explanation, it comes off more as an error than a strength for the story.