Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25975226-20150313125009/@comment-26027160-20150313143827

It's good that you keep on with poetry!!!

So you decided to use classic ABAB 8686. That's quite good. Now, to the few things that could be improved. You use "say" in the same rhyme two times after each other, which doesn't sound too nice. On the second "say" (4 stanza, 3rd line) you have 7 syllables- sound-ed, which stops the flow. I would recommend to rewrite that line. Similar situation with the first (3rd stanza, 3rd line) "say"- you missed a syllable with "scared" (according to the formate, you need 8). You can substitute it with "af-raid" or a similar synonym to smoothe it out.

The content isn't particulary creepy yet, but, if you continue on the poem and describe what happened to the character in the forest, it will surely meet the horror standard of Creepypastas (not that it doesn't already, but...)

Your'e totally on the right track. Keep it up!