Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20170409203227/@comment-5952769-20170417110437

This is a good scary story. It starts with a spooky and relatable situation, and moves from realistic dread to overt horror and finally into the strange and supernatural.

There are some things to work on. You jump around a few times with regard to the sequence of events. I find that confusing. You also might want to add more details about the friends, their disappearances, and the discovery of their bodies and the ruined car. The pace is decent, but I think there should be a little more time to get to know the characters, and time for the horror of the events to sink in.

The part about the wolves' language seems out of place. The narrator has already seen the monsters by that point, so he knows they're not ordinary wolves. It would make sense to place this part earlier, when he's in a foreboding situation rather than an imminently deadly one. Also, I really think "the size of mini vans" is an awkward comparison to make in a story with such a serious tone and voice.

I think this has a solid premise and some strong imagery, and you're well on your way to developing it into a great pasta. "The Wolves of Saskatchewan" seems like a better title to me. It gives the reader a clearer idea of what it's about.