Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25839052-20140927050701/@comment-25839052-20140927073322

EmpyrealInvective wrote: A few points: "Immediately ask him "What will happen when they all come together?". (Period not necessary as question mark is the proper closer.)

As for the numbers, I can't really help on that front. (I'd select an unoccupied number or maybe one beyond the set list.)

To be honest, if I was a massive fan of holders pastas, I would like to hear more details about the ordeals you have to go through to obtain the object and its effect/power on the holder. Without that, the story does't really have the feel of a Holders pasta. Ok, thanks for the advice! I will soon reply the story BUT edited. When I reply, please look at it and tell me if it's good and I can put it on the Spinpasta Wiki OR anything I forgot to do.