Talk:The Tower/@comment-35911608-20200221010316

The Tower - by trashbinrat (#16, The Tower)

While a very intriguing premise, this story leaves a bit to be desired. I like the very literal use of the Tower in this story, with a mad king and a usurping guard creating chaos - though I would’ve liked a little more chaos if possible. The fortune teller was a fun touch, I was hoping someone would include an actual fortune teller in their story.

Overall, I like the plot. However, there are a few issues I have. Your dialogue is fantastic a majority of the time (I particularly loved the line from the witch about “infinite paths become one”; I think a different but really cool story could come out of just focusing on that point alone), but your prose needs a bit of work. On top of that, that were a number of typos throughout the story. In regards to horror, eh.. a bit lacking in this department. I wasn’t necessarily horrified by any of the events, the only thing I really had was a slight dread in my stomach. As a whole, I think the story is okay, but it definitely could’ve used a little more time in the oven. Good effort.

Style - 3/5

Creepiness - 2/5

Enjoyment - 2/5

Use of Theme - 3/5

-1 for Errors

Grand Total: 9/20