Talk:Corrolis/@comment-39925291-20190626233535/@comment-35911608-20190627021107

Firstly, I'd like to welcome you to the wiki then.

However, now comes the less fun side. This story simply is not ready in its current form. Most of the grammatical errors have been fixed, but mechanically this story is VERY clunky. It also appears to have come from the Clan of Repetition Clan. Things are constantly said and then re-said a lot, sometimes within the span of the same paragraph. Just go back and count how many times someone said 2 AM - people wouldn't normally talk this way.

Luckily, there's always the writer's workshop to help you out. If you post your story there, you can get even more help with the story. I wish you luck, and I'll see ya around.