Talk:Your Results

I think you could have gone into more detail as to what it's like to be a monster. This would make the story more relatable and evoke more emotion.

I didn't care for the "you cannot exit or you will die" part, too cliche for my tastes.

The message the story presented was good, with the "You are you, love it." But it honestly came across to me as a motivational speech type thing and not very creepy. I do think it has potential though. Keep writing.

AstroZombie337 09:06, May 10, 2012 (UTC)