Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29723173-20160822132844/@comment-26456022-20160822143525

Ok wtf actually was that and what does that ending even mean? That went from 0 to a hundred fast and the transition from beginning to middle didn't make sense. Same with the middle to end go into more detail with the part were all 60 go missing. That keeps me reading.

Mainly you need more detail in the entire thing. Work on those transitions! I would love to see more of your writing soon