Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24954258-20151026041647/@comment-27008899-20151026115931

"Found himself walking" (lower case w). "Even though (not through) vegetation". "Broken dicarded dreams apon (I recommend not using Old English as most readers will think this mispelled. Change to upon) a horizon".

"for an easily perceivable amount (both the later misspelled) of time".

Para 3 is good

"and now they (not there) were all here".

"he had friends... a name" (The elipsis do not work well after and [opinion]) "He had none (misspelled) of that"

In all, it was a interesting piece. Very Lovecraftian. The problem I have is it doesn't really tell a story. It sounds like the beginning of something I would love to read, but just falls off as soon as it gets interesting. Expand, take to chapters if you must. How did he get there, what will he do now?