Talk:Unrest/@comment-25326117-20141004085957

So, how is the character certain about the smiling caretaker?

1) There were a few that I counted.  I thought the period was supposed to be in the quotation marks (apostrophes, I think. Correct me if I am wrong) along with the subject.

Example(s):

'Who can knock these blocks down in the coolest way.'

'The Playroom.'

2) Is the 'j' in 'jubilant' supposed to be capitalized?  I mean, it's still a part of the sentence: 'I pushed open the door to the kitchen and my jubilant feeling was replaced with that of confusion and fear.'

3) Isn't there supposed to be commas separating the adjectives that describe the subjects?

Example(s):

'hard, wooden floor'

'tight, black trousers'

4) Isn't there also supposed to be Exclamation Marks with what the caretaker said in what I thought was a demanding order?  I don't know how I should put it like:

"I love you!"

"Let me in, Alex, let me love you!"

The other caretaker telling Alex to get out as in:

"Get out now!"

There was also the Jenga Tower ordering Alex to:

"Play with me!"

5)I think these two sentences could have been better as one as in 'My eyes opened wide as my legs shook uncontrollably as I turned slowly.'

6) Isn't 'cartakers' a possessive in the following: 'caretaker's normal uniform?'

7) There's also the dad exclaiming to Alex that his encounter with the smiling caretaker was impossible, because as it took place on a weekend.  So, maybe, it should go something like this: "Alex, it's the weekend!"

8) And, Alex kept referring to the caretaker that kept coming after him as the smiling caretaker.  Shouldn't 'The Smiling Caretaker' be in apostrophes and capitalized because Alex kept referring to the antagonist as such.

The story did have a lot of suspence built up, I could be wrong about the grammar errors. I hoped I could help. Whoever wrote this creepyasta, good job!