Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180821164405/@comment-36393004-20180821174244

When I first started reading this I thought it would be one of those stories that are from the perspective of an unwilling video game character. I am glad I was wrong. I think it's a great idea that could turn into an interesting finished piece. I'm not sure why it bothered me but the long spans of text being displayed across his vision at one time seems...unrealistic. I thought the shorter unexplained choices where far more intimidating/scary. Just my two cents.