Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25636022-20141109143657/@comment-25636022-20141110072626

First of all, Thank you for the review, Levi. "Soneta Oculi Atri" means "Sonnet of the Dark Eye"; I self-teach myself Latin; I love the classical Latin.

"Sometimes lie." is equal to "It is, sometimes, telling a lie." Yes, it is really forced. The seventh line: "Across the time; much anguish endured, I'd" pertains to the emotional and mental anguish caused by the "dark eye".

About my envoi (last two lines), I should really fix it...

REVISION:

I have this eye, it's a gift and a curse This dark vision makes me perceive the worst My dark eyes, the sight of darkness, it's thirst Seeing darkness easily, does immerse Crafted to chill my soul and core inside Opened by my loss of dear innocence Across the time; much anguish endured, I'd I used my eye too much, my own penance There are days that upon it, I rely There are days it's so harmful; sometimes lie Security, it augments; It protects My feelings, my mind, my life it affects I hope this eye be closed, wish it's sewn shut I'm afraid I can't, this remains unshut.

[The poem is about having above average knowledge than of my peers that I develop a high sensitivity of fear, paranoia, despair and pessimism that made me years of depression.]