Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29791712-20150325032318/@comment-26169026-20150327005237

I started reading this and I don't want to rip it to shreds. But I have to be honest, I can't finish it. Part of me feels like you didn't proof read at all. What I suggest is that you take this story and read it aloud and see how well things either flow or not. You have tense issues along with spelling and other grammar mistakes. When I write a story, I try to make sure I read it aloud to see whether it sounds correct or not.

Don't take my criticisms too hard. I will gladly read this again after revisions are made.