Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-11243334-20151109014719/@comment-27080023-20151109143107

Oohhhh I loved this story. It was very different and your "bad guy" is the sort of person that people could write fan fiction from like they do with Slender Man et al if you sort out the issues. Lucille is still on the run and capable of doing anything to any man :)

I loved the plot, it kept me engaged all the way through, and I loved the ending, althout maybe your protagonist could be left fearing more repercussions upon himself rather than just walking away unscathed.

The only issues that I had were, well, it wasn't written as well as it could have been in some places, meaning there seemed to be patches of unnecessary information, kind of like you were beating around the bush to say what you wanted to say in order for you to come off as more descriptive. Do you know what I mean? That is by no means an insult, it might not even be a bad thing, it is just not MY thing if I am reading a stoy, you know?

Well done though. I thorougly enjoyed this.