Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27246594-20151206024334

Story i'm writing for a friend and looking for advice on the story. The ending isn't quite finished but the story should still read just fine. Be blunt, honest, and constructive please! Really appreciate ANY advice, thank you!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CRUdXuUaBaNTiJQRxFRHEASJ4koZ1DcjDoqPq_QO20o/edit?usp=sharing 