Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20150110000358/@comment-25941663-20150110172515

Re-reading the first line, I understood what bugged me the first time. I would have liked a longer pause before the 'but enough about me' part. Maybe replace the coma with a period (' . ') (I know starting sentences with a conjuction is generally frowned upon, but in some cases it is very fitting).

If I were you, I would leave it as originally posted. As I said, English isn't my native language and the sentence might be off for just me.