Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28653890-20161112161456/@comment-24101790-20161112162611

First things first, lost episode pastas are currently blacklisted and need to go through a Spinoff Appeal. That being said, this story likely won't pass the appeals because it really isn't up to quality standards.

"I thought i'd (I'd) never have to see that, 2011, the year when Spongebob (SpongeBob) season 8 released, when we were reviewing the episodes, we found a box with a white cover art." Besides the capitalization issues, this is a pretty clunky opening. Who is we in that sentence? Why are you reviewing episodes? Where'd you find this random box? It doesn't really work as an opening.

"We opened the box and there was a disk marked with (a) pen and it said "Death Sponge" we thought it was a simple joke and we put (pushed) PLAY." Ignoring the wording issues, this feels relatively generic.

Then there's the ending: "Another black screen appeared with more scary sounds...at the end,a (space needed) scary Spongebob image appeared with a loud scream." It's not very descriptive and gives the story the feeling that it was written in a few minutes and not a lot of thought was put into it.

I'm sorry, but even if we did accept Lost Episode stories, this one has far too many capitalization, wording, spelling ("After 15 seconds a loud scream skirl (sic)...that scared us too much, the next scene was Patrick, Squidward, Mr. Krabs & Sandy in a cemetery"), and story issues to pass the basic standards for the site. The story is extremely rushed, the ending is anti-climactic, and the lack of build-up/description produces a relatively uninteresting story.