Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20160222063720/@comment-25941663-20160226233639

"warnings from futures days" - Do you mean "future days" or "future's days"?

"and something for beyond learns you are there" - I think it is 'from beyond'.

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The narrator's voice was interesting and worked well. Unfortunately, though, it's the only thing that kept me from leaving the page. The way he/she speaks is interesting, but what he/she says is not. Mostly it is generic rambling, I'm afraid.

Usually in stories like these there is a twist ending, or a big revelation, or something that sheds a new light to reality. In this, I didn't find that. To be honest, I got kinda lost.

Stories like this are hit-or-miss, and this one was a miss. The tone you went with is interesting, but I suggest you move on from this.