Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20160405191048/@comment-26030957-20160409220450

Ha ha. Awesome. Being a lover of language and puns I, of course, really enjoyed it. Here are a few of my thoughts:

"In sixth grade I won a spelling bee at my elementary school. Long story short—I won" --redundant, you said won twice, instead say "In sixth grade I entered a spelling bee"

"Raging rivers of adrenaline surged through my veins"--very nice alliteration with that metaphor.

The scene where he violently subdues her was tremendous. Brutal with a fast pace.

Your use of em-dashes was spot on and effective.

My only real advice would be to maybe start with more of a bang. Perhaps have him looking at her cut up and bloody and then have him think back to the spelling bee. Just a thought.

And the ending felt a bit rushed. It's such a clever story, maybe you could think of some crazy twist, or epiphany? Like, he gets caught and is now doing spelling bees in prison and the prison guard gives him a homonym? Something just. . . more. Know what I'm saying?