Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24918243-20140607065334/@comment-24115679-20140609175944

I like what you're going for here. Nana Razor is a really frightening character. The name alone gives me chills. However, I think the story is weakened somewhat by the fact that we know as soon as we read the last verse of the children's rhyme pretty much exactly how things will turn out. I would recommend trying to preserve the ambiguity about who Nana Razor's victim is actually going to be until near the end of the story. That way, when it turns out that the "boogeyman" is actually after the father's blood, rather than the child's, the twist will be more effective. Just my two cents. But you're definitely on to something good.