Talk:Innocent Souls/@comment-28360473-20160503061100

(I'm still kind of new to the Wiki and this is my first review. Sorry if it just isn't as good as others', but meh, I'll just share my opinion now.)

I love the allegory here! Not a lot of creepypastas are allegorical, which is sad considering I love depth when it comes to supernatural/spiritual things. Our universe is a massive and strange one; just ask Lovecraft. Anyway, I also found the concept very unique and interesting. Parenting is a very nice thing to write about when it comes to horror, come figure.

For the story itself, I felt it was too built around that of the conversation. For instance, at the start, entering the cave, rather than simply being in it, would've been more interesting, in my opinion. It would've been better had more things been happening on the main protagonist's side while traversing the cave, as well as a bit of overall action during the conversation itself, perhaps. The children aside from Feel also don't really have any characteristics to make any of them unique (but then again, they are blessed...) They don't even do anything that would make them similar to Feel. Of course, Feel also should've had more consistent dialogue.

Notwithstanding, this was incredible. The concept is unique and awesome, dealing with a rather concerning issue, and with a story feauturing dialogue kind of in the vein of some old tale or something, which I like as well.

Rock solid, dude. (Get it? 'Cause it's a cave and everything? Eh...) Probably one of my favorites from what I've seen, hitherto.