Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26872762-20150928173453/@comment-27024986-20150930201429

Ok as BelowXero explained, the information in the story come in big random chunks.

Since Im a begginer too I understand that its not so easy to write a story.

Just three questions and two facts:

1. How come he didnt died of blood loss since that demon girl chumped his arm?

2. How come a child with a broken leg and a hemoragy can outrun a grown adult in a good medical condition?

3. How come the CIA didnt killed him too when they heard he survived? Normal, the project would be erased along with any participant who is not part of the CIA. In extreme cases also agents of CIA would dissapear some way or another.

4. I didnt found this creepy. I more tought of it as a lighter version of survival horror.

5. The man who was talking as if he was the right hand of Satan was the dumbest character I ever heard in my life of. I mean, its Satan! As if he would share the world with such an idiot. Most probably kill him but not working with him.

If I sounded mean Im sorry.