Creepypasta Wiki:Deletion Appeal/Archive 5

Who Dares Win
Hello! This is Jett Cyber, and I was wondering why you deleted Who Dares Win. You said because of Quality Control, however I did not see anything wrong with it. I'm not necessarily asking for it to be put back on, I was just wondering what you saw wrong in it. Thanks! Jett Cyber (talk) 20:31, March 22, 2014 (UTC)
 * There are a few things wrong with this.
 * Your sentences are super-choppy in some areas. You have a couple of short sentences that could've easily been combined to one smoother sentence. Slow down.
 * The part where you wake up and miraculously memorize that list of people, their age, and gender before the TV suddenly shuts off. Completely unbelievable and if it weren't because I was reviewing this for your appeal, I would've stopped reading there.
 * Your use of caps. Caps are generally frowned upon using, as they look childish. Try using italics to get your point across.
 * Refrain from using terms like "mwahahaha" as they tend to degrade the integrity of a writer's story. Your story isn't a chat-room. If you want the reader to take you seriously, then start writing seriously.


 * Try some of these suggestions, then post the story in the Writer's Workshop. I can almost guarantee that it will be beneficial for you, since there is a lot of good feedback from fellow users there. Here is the link http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Board:Writer%27s_Workshop.
 * Mystreve (talk) 17:00, March 25, 2014 (UTC)

Empty Streets
Hey, this is Havoc98... I guess it always seems that I always meet up with some sort of trouble when I publish a pasta, not sure why, but it seems to be a habit xD

That put aside, I don't get in trouble for anything too big. Mainly a form admins didn't like, or no reason at all. Either way, my page makes it to the published section. I'm hoping this would be the same case, because I did put hard work into this pasta, more than the others I've made.

I'm not too sure why my page got deleted though. I had correct punctuation, correct spelling, I've re-read it at least three times, and I've even spaced it correctly. I made sure to revise it as much as possible, since I'm also presenting this as a form of writing for English class, so as you can probably tell, I was very picky and careful. I'd appreciate an explanation and advice to get my pasta back on its feet. Thanks in advance,

Havoc98 (talk) 22:45, March 22, 2014 (UTC)


 * I can tell you did put a good amount of work into the story, however there are still too many things to edit. You overuse ellipses. Like way too much. You also need to change paragraphs when a speaker changes. There were several times you didn't.


 * Anyway, it seems the story itself is okay. There are just too many things to edit. I suggest revising it and putting into the writer's workshop. It's a good place to get reviews and help. Here's the link.[].
 * Mystreve (talk) 12:27, March 24, 2014 (UTC)

Mr. Funny
Hey, there was this pasta I really liked and it was called 'mr. funny.' it was very spooky and can you un-delete it? It was probably one of the best pastas that gave me creeps!

DATGUY66 (talk) 18:14, March 23, 2014 (UTC)DATGUY66

Nobody Knows Pasta
Just wanted to know why my Creepypasta Nobody Knows was deleted the quality standers were fine people had edit it to make it even better. So please can you undelete my pasta it took me hours please say why it was deleted and maybe undelete it thank you

Why was my page Nobody Knows deleted grammar was fine had capitals full stops commos question marks everything it needed why was it deleted and can you please undeleted it, it took me hours alot of hours anyway thank you

Typical Delusion
A short story that I wrote, 'Typical Delusion', got deleted. The deletion said it "Lacked story/content". I disagree.

Princess Callie made a blog post in regards to micro-pastas, which can be seen here - User blog:Princess Callie/How to Write a Micropasta (Or, A Possible Reason Your Micro Was Deleted)

1) My story does have a two-event (at least) plot.

2) My story does use description and imagery, but I don't feel it's in excess.

3) There are elements of my story that although it can be inferred/assumed what it is, it is never specifically said (Mystery). For example, one of my characters suffered from a mental illness which caused delusions. You can assume/infer what it is, but it is never said.

AlcohollicA (talk)
 * It doesn't need to be said. His wife and the doctor are looking at him in a cell. Of course there's something wrong with him, mentally. But the story still falls flat, plot-wise.
 * Mystreve (talk) 11:57, March 24, 2014 (UTC)

Bloody Slave
Hi i make the story of bloody slave, hoping this time i will get my story upload,but again it was on appeal so i think i make this scare scary this time. Solonor1987
 * Read the signature rules above more closely. That's the only reason that I am denying your appeal.
 * Mystreve (talk) 12:04, March 24, 2014 (UTC)

Hi 'LOLSKELETONS', I'd just like to ask why my post 'Don't Think About It.' Was deleted. I don't mean to be rude or aggressive when I say this, I would just like to know why it was deleted seeing as I put quite a bit of effort into it. Thank you for you're time.

Your's sincerely Felix Phipps.

Retiring
Hello, this is Jygilzo. If you don't mind, I'd like to know some specific reasons why my pasta was deleted. It says it did not meet the quality standards, but I did not notice very much wrong with it. If it looked like a wall-o-text, please say so. Other than that, please explain what I did wrong.

Thanks,

Jygilzo (talk) 04:57, March 25, 2014 (UTC)Jygilzo
 * It wasn't too bad. Just needs some paragraph separation in places.
 * Mystreve (talk) 15:46, March 25, 2014 (UTC)

Article Deleted For No Apparant Reason
I wrote an article called "He's Been Dead" last May. I also wrote a few others in the last several months and there seemed to be no problem, however after coming back to write my most recent story, it was gone. I  do not know when it was deleted or why as I was not alerted, and it seems as if the article no longer exists. After looking at the rules there seems to be no problems there. Gramatically there may have been some slight errors. Also the fact that it was deleted without anyone telling me so just baffles me. The idea did not just pop into my mind one day, I have been planning it out for quite awhile before I posted it, maybe if I made some mistakes I can fix them and even improve parts of  it. If for some reason I cannot get the story re approved, I would like to be able to get a copy of the writing so I can make major improvements, or just be able to read it again so it is not gone forever. Also, the person that the story is talking about knows about the story and had no problems with it being posted. Please reply so I can understand the issue, and fix up the article.

Thanks,

Mystery12 (talk) 01:39, March 26, 2014 (UTC)Mystery12


 * The story really isn't scary at all. I think it might've had the potential to be, but the way it is told, just isn't.


 * One reason is, you need to take the time and engage the reader with some more detail other than, "The temperature dropped. I went and looked. I saw a body. I ran." That is essentially how the story reads, and quite frankly, it isn't very interesting as it is written. I say that last part with emphasis, because I think if you spend more time providing more detail (or building up to a better climax), you would probably have something here.


 * On a brighter note, I noticed your grammar is pretty decent, and I only noticed one or two spelling errors. You separate paragraphs well too.


 * Unfortunately, this doesn't make a good read. I suggest going through the work again and working on some of the things I pointed out.


 * Here is a link to a pastebin with your story for review. []


 * Mystreve (talk) 12:35, March 26, 2014 (UTC)

Master Clark
Hi, I uploaded a pasta about a week ago, however it was taken down twice. The first account was because I had posted a pasta that was a wall o text by accident because I copied and pasted it on a mobile device, even though I spaced my story out correctly when doing it on the mobile device. I guess it didn't properly transfer. Anyways, it's deleted for this. Afterwards, without knowing that this was means for a redeletion, I reuploaded the pasta and changed the errors, but of course, it was deleted again for the crime of reposting a deleted pasta. So I ask you, please undelete my pasta so I may revise the spacing error and publish it. I've honestly learned from my mistake, and will read the rules more clearly. Also, if there was any other reason besides this as the reason to take down my story, please tell me if there was anything else wrong with it- I work more efficiently with criticism. Thanks. &#58;jcmba: (talk) 13:19, March 26, 2014 (UTC)Jcmba
 * Still a giant wall of text. Personally, I can't even read walls of text as they hurt my eyes, so I didn't delve too far into the story to examine the content.


 * Here is a pastebin link to your story []. When you revise it, I suggest you put it into the site's Writer's Workshop for peer review. Here is the link for that. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Board:Writer%27s_Workshop


 * Mystreve (talk) 14:01, March 26, 2014 (UTC)

Empty Streets(updated)
In regard's to this morning's deletion, I forgot that I needed to re-apply for an appeal, which was a mistake on my part. My bad. This time, I correctly spaced it and removed the ellipses which caused my page to get deleted. My page was up all night, and wasn't marked for deletion or removed for not meeting the rules. I believe an admin known as Sloshedtrain or something around that name edited my pasta last night, and hasn't complained about it at all or marked it for removal.

I've made sure to meet the necessary rules, and revised it. So, now I'm only here to get permission to run it again. I haven't posted in a long time and with the recent changes on the wiki, I still tend to get lost; so I apologize for being a bit of a bother, and thanks in advance.

Havoc98 (talk) 22:23, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
 * Still going with a "no". I reviewed the history of this pasta, and it was deleted four different times within the span of four days. The latest revision that was deleted still contains several mistakes that I was able to spot quickly (sentence structure issues mostly). I'm glad you have a better version ready for submission, but the deletion history is just too much for me to feel comfortable giving the go-ahead.


 * But, all hope isn't lost. Post it into the Writer's Workshop for some constructive peer review. It has helped a lot of writers here who needed a bit of guidance (and let's face it, we all need guidance as writers sometimes); many of them were later able to repost their story to the main site. Here is the link http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Board:Writer%27s_Workshop. I'll even give it a look when you post it there. Looking forward to seeing it!


 * Mystreve (talk) 00:51, March 27, 2014 (UTC)