Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180921153801/@comment-36393004-20180924204650

BloodySpghetti wrote: Alright, no complains here, pretty much. Now this thing has a reason, a meaning and a purpose. I like what you did with the overall game setting. I saw what you did there with the handle, and the numbers riddle winkwink. The first level seems pretty cool as well and reminded me of some movie about a competition between a bunch of Freerunners playing capture the flag and have some bomb implanted in their head - you lose you die, you try to escape you die, kind of situation.

Nice.

All was fine and dandy until "Our master"... ugh... you have to change it to "Our employer" or "Our benefector" it looks less weird and more professional. Also, "Our Employer uses common folk for his pleasure, or to do his dirty work..." something of this sort.

Other than that, the perspective switches felt kind of ran-on, so check your language once more and I say this is ready after that. Thanks, I had more fun writing this version anyway.