Talk:Tempest/@comment-35911608-20200221005231

Tempest - by L0CKED334 (#13, Death)

Reminded me in some parts of the film 1408, based on the Stephen King short story. Excellently written, as to be expected from you Locked - your style is out of this world. I don’t know how you don’t have a published work yet. The descriptions and metaphors are fantastic, and the visual work made it very easy to tell what was going on while providing great flavour. The depiction of Death was pretty good, there were definitely aspects from both sides of the card used here, and then adding the literal imagery of the card was something I enjoyed.

That said, I did not find the story very creepy. It’s a very well fleshed out experience from the perspective of someone who knows alcohol addiction, but I shall borrow a line from K. Banning Kellum when he reviewed my drug story: it felt like it served to inform more than to frighten (though it was more frightening than my story). Nothing inherently wrong with that of course, but it does take off a few points in that category. As well, this is something I have seen before, so it’s not overly unique in that sense to me.

Style - 5/5

Creepiness - 3/5

Enjoyment - 3/5

Use of Theme - 5/5

-1 for Errors

Grand Total - 15/20