Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26502770-20150617190235/@comment-25037895-20150621230801

The storyline seems anti-climactic with the description at the end. The spider bit seems to cut off the bit about the hatman. Instead of introducing a new idea with the spider, you should have added details to make the hatman more creepy. It's also anti-climactic with this: "Daniel blamed it on his phobia and stared into the bathroom light." As it may suggest to the reader that it is not that much to be afraid of, it erases the tension built up to that point.