Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24899119-20140601045246/@comment-24821182-20140601072830

This does not meet quality standards; even if you corrected the grammatical mistakes, it would still get taken down.

I'll list the errors you made anyway:

It's called "On an isolated farm" and not "In an isolated farm". You incorrectly use its instead of it's, remember that its shows possession, when it's means it is.

You do not need more than one exclamation mark at the end of a sentence. Ever. It gets absolutely insane when you add nine at one point, and SCREAMING IN ALL CAPS is painful to look at. Also, you do not need that many ellipses, and under no circumstances should an ellipsis be longer than the standard three periods.

You forget to capitalize the one-letter word I, which must always be capitalized. You forget to capitalize the first letters of l'ater, e'veryone, my, etc. when those words start a new sentence, and you forget to add spacing between punctuation and the word that comes immediately afterwards.

During dialogue, you seem to add punctuation outside the quotation marks, when it should be put inside. You also need to start a new paragraph whenever person B says something after person A, as it makes it easier to see who's saying what.

You misspell a lot of really basic words, like are, upstairs, approaches, and let's. You write a terribly long scream in the form of AAAAAAAAHHHHHH, which you should shorten to ahh (still no ALL CAPS).

Lastly, some of the phrasing is odd, "He went outside also then Robert, my brother grabbed his shotgun and turned it around and shot his head."

As I said in the first line, even if you correct all of the grammatical issues, the story will still not meet quality standards, as it's cliché and fails to build a proper ambiance or even make sense. I suggest you try writing something else, and when you're done, you can post it here, and I'll take a look at it.