Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5462912-20170821101838/@comment-5462912-20170823163220

ChristianWallis wrote: Is this feedback unpleasant? No, not at all. It points out that I can make the story more concise even further. It serves as something of a reminder until I get around to the heart of the matter, and what is more important to me: how you think the story really ended.

This is because I want to strengthen a point in the story itself about the game that influences the ending. If I nail that one part down, I'll be able to safely work down to the events and the writing style itself.

Thanks for the input! I'll be awaiting your full review eagerly. Do take your time.