Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444401-20150824035820/@comment-25547916-20150824054505

Alright, I like the idea of this one, and it's fairly well executed. This story's dialogue reads very naturally, as a text conversation should; the banter between the character went down well. A minor issue that caught my attention: The last two lines describing the context for the story don't seem to be necessary; the final text Luxan sends does the job and the two lines feel tacked on. Really, there's not much else to say, the story is pretty short and works just fine for the most part.