Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36299239-20181118023254/@comment-9041013-20181118224300

What is this even meant to be? It's not exactly the best idea to tell the readers "you are doing this and that" it kills the spook. I'm not sure I'd follow some stranger into a graveyard for sex. No matter how hot or charming said stranger is. Thus, I can't relate and enjoy this story.

Also, looking super anaemic is a turn-off... so magical attraction? Ehh

In the end I've become a ghost right? Not very good either, because if I read that I am alive and thus it won't work, curse is lifted poor Zombromantic dies.

You've some grammatical problems here and there, so you'd need to fix this too.