Talk:Jeff the Killer/@comment-24696015-20140317025426

This story has some good points. The prose is good, the pacing is okay, and there's an effort to get inside the heads of the characters..... for a time.

Unfortunately, in the end, it's pretty weak. My own opinions about the image aside(I feel it's much less scary when we know it's just a human being, and a kid at that), the transition from "kid who's been forced into violence" to "serial killer" is completely nonexistent. He's hurt, he likes his new face, he mutilates it further, and then he starts killing people..... for... no reason. There's no direction, no motivation, no foreshadowing. This character ultimately has no identity. His generic name, "Jeff the killer" isn't ironic or mysterious, it's literally all there is to him.

Any plot holes or suspensions of disbelief the story requires, I can handle. They're things that can be easily edited or handwaved away. But the concept itself could do with a serious rework.