Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180623102805/@comment-35973449-20180629192959

Overall, good use of description grammar and word usage. Your writing flows rather well. The story? There are some things I would re-think.

First, Julia's news cast seems a little awkward in the phrasing.

"A viral video has been circling the Internet depicting a brutal exchange between two homeless men. The individuals involved appear to have gotten into an argument regarding spacing limitations of the underpass they were living in. That altercation erupted into a fistfight which ultimately resulted in the death of one of the men." Julia paused momentarily, glancing down at the IPad in front of her. "Now, we want to warn you that what you are about to see may be disturbing to some viewers."

News casters often use quick flashy wording. This part just seems a bit clunky. Especially the term "gotten." It would sound more like "Two individuals involved in an argument over territory ends in a brutal altercation..."

I did enjoy the twist at the end. But what confused me is the bit about your main character being involved with the police. He's an audio engineer, right? How does he possess any skills that could benefit the police? If he's just lying to Julia wouldn't she be intelligent enough to know better? If he isn't actually working with the police, where does his knowledge come from? You may want to expand a bit on that. It's sort of just glossed over.

This piece does show good writing skills. I look forward to seeing what you do with them in the future.