Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5952769-20171116113143/@comment-25941663-20171208150123

In its current state, yes. You could improve it, but I feel your time will be better spent on something different. This premise requires a very experienced writer and you currently need to practice more. You have a lot of potential, this plot is just too difficult to pull off, since it doesn't have an inherently creepy premise (ie. dust clouds aren't scary).