Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28856385-20190102110255/@comment-36627132-20190102112124

I have little to say about this story.

The first half is just pointless filler material that does not grab its reader or encourage them to keep reading, and the second half is pointless violence that tries to compensate for lack of actual horror. The last line "Now we definitely aren’t his friends anymore." make the whole story come off as a joke.