Talk:Death Tends to Appreciate Its Fans/@comment-26425680-20160126013451


 * I'm not sure what the relationship between Alex and Raj is supposed to be. At first it seems as if Alex is simply a part-time employee. However it turns out that Alex actually lives above the mortuary, and Raj seems to take on more of a parental role than that of a boss (sending him upstairs to do an essay). So the intro to the story doesn't really mesh with what we find out later. It just came off as a bit odd.


 * Your characterization of Raj was good. I loved the way he handled the "where are you from?" question. That was an effective way to give us some insight into his personality. I'd like to read more about him.


 * The ending wasn't surprising at all... well I suppose the mouth/stomach part was unexpected, but I think we all knew where Raj was getting his sustenance from. Still, you did a good job handling the final reveal.