Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24797411-20140418183538/@comment-24784485-20140418211549

But otherwise it was a decent build up. Oh, I DID like the description of the dream. I don't mind the little girl in the dream. That's creepy. But don't make her the one actually giving them the nightmares (if you know what I mean). If you decide to keep her, at least get rid of the cheesy one liner. Instead, say at the end "and outside the window, a little girl smiled." Or something like that.