Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20161130072138/@comment-27905100-20161203162914

While observing and scouring across this constantly expanding universe, never have I ever witnessed life displaying this unusual behavior before. These creatures refer to themselves as humans I presume, not a nice (The word 'nice' is technically correct here, but 'well' fits much better) fitting name if you ask me.

Brothers, sisters please control your childish attitude. You know what I'm capable (the word 'of' should go here), right? To answer some of you all(Take out the word 'all'), I've heard about the reputation regarding these hairless apes. Quite notorious for their violence among others and their own despite retaining high levels of intelligence, I'll have to admit. But ponder for a second, why am I so interested in them all of the(This should be 'a', not 'the'.) sudden?

Unlike most advanced lifeforms they've adapted countless writing systems. Not an impressive feat you might say, but take a careful and closer (Saying 'careful and closer' seems unnecessary. Just say 'careful' or 'closer'. Both would work equally well, just not together.)look at (The word 'their' should go here) writings. Perhaps you'll notice that several of their crafts appeared to be done in the form of storytelling, quite similar to what our father does.

If you dig deeper into it, you shall see for yourselves the tremendous amount of effort these creatures are more than willing to undergo just to write out a story is simply astonishing. Sure' what they've written aren't(This should be isn't.) perfect' yet they constantly strive to portray everything; no matter how big or small as accurately as possible. I can't even begin to imagine the time it takes to produce such magnificent content. Nothing I've ever seen before has exhibited such (The word 'a' should go here.) strange nature.

I've personally spent my time reading their art starting from the most well-known to the (The word 'most' should go here.) obscure of the bunch and I still can't get over it. (Something about the transition between these two sentences bothers me.) Little do they know that by creating such spectacular works, they're becoming Gods in a way. Creating countless intricate dimensions, all slightly different from another,This should be a period.) I believe all of you have heard about it at least once.

Best part is, they're eager to subject their own creations to simple yet painful scenarios solely to entertain themselves and impress others alike. And you thought our oldest brother was cruel. (Due to the way these two sentences flow, I'd consider making this one a separate paragraph. And yes, I know that I said they should be in the same paragraph. Sorry about that.) I wouldn't be too harsh though,(While technically correct, I'd make this comma a period.) being fictional work themselves had its toll on them after all.

Okay. Um... That's all I have to say about this. Maybe make those edits, and see what Christian and Jay have to say. I hope to see this up soon.