Talk:Sleeping to Be Awake/@comment-24675373-20140321165750

I started reading this pasta and did my best to ignore how bad the punctuation was. It starts off interesting, the idea that everything is actually a dream....but then it starts to get sloppy. Character dialogue happens without quotations and punctuation becomes less and less. It ruins the pacing. I got up to the paragraph where he realizes it's all his father and noticed there wasnt a single period. 15 lines with no period. That entire paragraph was one, huge, run-on sentence. I couldn't bring myself to continue. I'm sure this is a good read, but it needs severe editing for grammar.

4/10