Talk:The Crow Girl/@comment-25340844-20140905001657

Just a suggestion; avoid using phrases like "scared shitless" and "I almost shat myself." They completely destroy any tension you've managed to build up. I suppose they're acceptable in dialogue; in a conversation between good friends, but not when you're describing to the reader the terror of coming face-to-face with a seemingly supernatural being. I find that such phrases make the author seem lazy - like they couldn't be bothered to consider how they'd feel in a particular situation, so they're just going to go with a phrase that's overused to the point of meaninglessness.