Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25609857-20150305220706

So I wrote this  pasta last year and I really dont like it. I've been trying to improve and I have rewriten it dozens of times but I cant seem to make somthing scary enough. I thought if i came here I could get some suggestions. If you do wnt to help please explain EVERYTHING I need to improve on. I would really like to make it longer and have a plot twist, so please also give me suggestions and ideas for when I rewrite it.

THANKS 