Board Thread:Questions and Answers/@comment-24835275-20130408220024/@comment-4750363-20130408220419

It is a bit short. Short and undetailed. I can't say I'll remember this pasta, sorry.

I suggest that you take the time to write on a piece of paper the main points you want in the story. Then you try to write the things that go between them.

It should help you to have a clarer picture of the story, meaning that maybe it could help you improve it.