Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37482493-20190306030931/@comment-25763427-20190419025107

You need to read through the work before you post it, to check to see if you have accidentally repeated phrases or words. You need to widen the vocabulary used. "except traces of fire in the grass" should be "trails of seared grass" or something along those lines. You need to be more descriptive. Don't say "it was a red newt figure", say that eye-witnesses reported it having red scales and a long tail. You need to rework this if you want it to be creepy. Right now it's just kind of weird, in a specific way that makes it feel like you are referencing something I don't know. Consider if the fact that the lizard monster being able to catch fire makes it more or less scary. There are cryptid reports of a Lizard-Man in South Carolina, and if it was on fire, it would make it more silly, not necessarily more scary. You should expand each account. The news article that the story begins with should be longer and more vague, we shouldn't get a full picture. Then the testimony of the hunter and the journal entry should be more personality based, with greater detail, while the news article remains scientific. When the firenewt puts its hand on the rifle of the hunter's gun, it turns the whole thing, including the metal parts, to ashes? If it can do that, why doesn't it just kill the man? Then twice people escape from it simply by running, making it feel like not that much of a threat. Don't play into this creature having super powers. If you want it to be scary, play into whatever strange intelligence it has and how it's motives and origin are unknown. Create a cohesive narrative which is approached from multiple angles.