Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25922165-20190328214355/@comment-35911608-20190331165753

I liked it, but it does need work. The story itself is quite interesting, it was drawn out enough to build my suspense, though I'm not quite sure about the ending. Yeah, it's a twist, but it doesn't really fit unless the reader is a pedo. Forcing us into that role doesn't work fantastically, maybe try rewriting why the child is killing us to include more than just predators.

As Dr. Bob stated, there is a lot of grammatical errors in the story that need to be smoothed out. Just take the time to go through it and fix them up, or run it through a grammar checker as suggested.