Talk:Clown Dogs/@comment-25383866-20150123001243

This was actually pretty good. I started it very doubtful, as the protagonist is a high-school girl, but you managed to write this story in such a way that it didn't get mired in all the bullshit stories about highschoolers usually do. You also have a very mature voice, which lends credence to it. The premise, however, smacks of /r/nosleep/ OC from years ago- facebook messages from dead friends isn't entirely new territory. Also, there was one line that made absolutely no sense, and I had no idea how to edit it- "I was probably way to blame myself, too." It's when she finds Alyssa crying in the girls' room. Overall, not a bad effort.