Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33135370-20180726014958/@comment-26444017-20180726041125

It feels a little bare bones at the moment. Granted, the ritual itself is relatively simple, so there's not much there to work with. I suggest expanding on the first and second nights, perhaps detailing the sorts of nightmares Clara might give you.

Your grammar and spelling are pretty good, actually. That's a refreshing change :)

As far as overall issues go, I did notice a couple. Firstly, the phrase 'light out your candle' sound strange to me. Maybe it's a regional thing, but I think 'put out' or better yet 'snuff out' would be your best options there.

Secondly, You say to pick up the second night where you ended the first, but the times don't match. This is probably something that just got overlooked, and it's an easy fix.

Thirdly, the phrase 'impossible to describe' is a big no no. It makes it seem like the writer just didn't feel like thinking up a description. That should be an easy fix too; What does the voice sound like? Is it grating, or raspy, or maybe beautiful and melodic, or somewhere in between. Even if it doesn't speak a comprehendable language, you can still describe the voice. You may even want to throw in unique tics in the language, like rolling letters or sharp utterances, things like that.

Finally, you night three paragraph feels a little wall-o-text-ish. Easily corrected, simply break it up into two paragraphs.

Hope this helped :)