Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180319132312/@comment-34823985-20180325235623

Ok, the blurred narration was a worry of mine. I still intend to work on this story a bit, but I wanted some feedback, so thanks. I figured I stepped on a cliché, but I don't think clichés always need to be avoided. They don't usually explode. Most of my stories probably do and will have some slight comedic part or two in them. It's just how I write. It is something I'm working on, because sometimes I am trying to be serious (not in this story). So, "She's right, Carl, I'm dead." stays in the story. LOL! Thanks for the *winks* and the feedback.