Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36815674-20180919161410/@comment-36393004-20180921195037

BloodySpghetti wrote: NoTimeCreepy wrote: Updated at top.let me know what you think. My suggestion is, pretend you're walking on a dark path and you are freaking about every mundane sound and sight. Basically, you should sprinkle the story with his fears and worries and detail how the whole walk takes place... make it lengthier I say.

Your story is VERY short, so adding a few more paragraphs won't make it offputtingly long, you've nothing to worry about. Agreed, plus there are a couple minor capitalization errors but if you are doing that from a phone it makes sense.