Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26416562-20150731193258/@comment-26475253-20150731214317

Alright, gonna start listing off the errors as I read... Space after periods before the next word. Which is spelled with an 'h' after the W. If you're talking about THE God, then the G is capitalized, as it is his name. Contorted doesn't need to be capitalized. I believe Hell in this case would be capitalized, as it is a certain place. It definitely needs to flow better and use better adjectives. Sentences themselves should be fleshed out, as these are very basic. You need to develop this more, I would work on this for a few more days at least before moving on.