Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25536002-20141014232848/@comment-25226524-20141015004545

You really need to break this up into paragraphs before most people here will look at it. It's hard on the eyes when reading something that's a wall of text like this. I also noticed in the first sentence that you said it's not a creepypasta. You should consider removing the creepypasta reference, as it's almost never a good idea to make that reference, especially right at the start. If you break it up into paragraphs, I'll try to take a look at it later.