Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20141205223422/@comment-24101790-20141205224517

Just a quick thing: "It's eyes were closed..." should be "Its eyes..."

It's an interesting concept (aliens taking humans as pets), but I would like to see it a little more fleshed out to build the creepiness. Maybe the aliens understanding of the creature is lacking and the 'pet' suffers as a result. Or maybe you could have more interactions between the alien and his pet, trying to feed him, trying to pet him, trying to play with him; and how that terrifies Simon.

Fleshed out a little, it would be a story that I would definitely sit down and read.