Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140910203423/@comment-25226524-20140910234002

This one is very relatable to me (other than attacking people). The first third of the story I felt like I was reading my own previous thoughts. The philosophical edge was very well done. You did a great job of describing the pain felt while watching something you care about be ruined by herd mentality. (pretentious, I know)

As usual, there were almost no issues, but the few that were there should be easy to catch if you look over it a couple more times. One little thing that stood out to me was the beginning of the fifth paragraph from the bottom, "She screamed a lot..." This just sounded a little awkward to me for some reason.

The flow and description were all on point. I was definitely pulled into the scene. The rage within the protagonist was very well done. I also love the fact that they called 911 for the victim.

Another good work that I enjoyed,  keep it up.