Talk:It Won't Matter If I Kill Him/@comment-25052433-20140806045529

This was masterful. Your use of logical parameters as lucid concepts was a refreshing read.

Let's review though.

What went right:

-Your research is apparent in this work. You dip into quite a few existential philosophies while tying together the over all god-complex that your antagonist is suffering from. She is clearly crazy, but she knows she is crazy, which makes her that much more difficult to lock on to.

-The scene where she names the character Steve was rather brilliant. She dismisses his actual name, simply because she doesn't think it fits him. That fed into her obvious mental illness and god-complex, while still demonstrating that she could maintain a devious mastery of the situation.

-The fact that she cared about the final resting place of his soul added just another dimension to her insanity. For an antagonist that is never named, never described and only exists in one scene, you did a fine job of developing her.

What could have improved my experience:

-I never like Creepy Pastas that reference Creepy Pasta. I would have left that out, but that is more of just a personal opinion.

Honestly, for what this is, I cannot think of too many other critiques. Your grammar and vocabulary are impressive. This wasn't so much a story, as it was a telling of madness. That is still a story, just not the typical start, middle and end concept we are used to. That doesn't make it bad, just unique, in a good way.

8/10, great job.