Talk:When a School Trip Goes Wrong/@comment-29507836-20161011104156

It's just a man with scars on his face killing a kid by tying him up on the tracks of the rollercoaster with a little bit of gore to add to it. What's so scary and good about that? All you did was get a murderer appearing in his dreams, which results to him having a rough time in real life, and then the murderer kills him. So cliche. I also didn't like the fact that the way you wrote it made it seem like you wrote it in less than an hour; lack of description, feeling, and development. The pace was ok, but definitely improvable. I don't see why others are saying this is good. Please tell me why, I would be delightful to know.

In fact, the only thing I liked about this story is that it steered from the casual "found dead in bathroom" cliche. That's it.

I rate this a poor 2/10. Next time, I would suggest adding more details to the story and to try and steer away from the cliches. I'd suggest you read the list of cliches on this wiki, too.