Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24181913-20150214223244/@comment-25226524-20150214231520

I agree with everything said above. There were also a few mistakes here and there. The one that stood out was the homophone issue where you used 'peaked' instead of 'piqued'. If you work on the issues stated in the above comments, I think you may be able to make this work. Good luck.