Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180724100603/@comment-26444017-20180724201735

I appreciate the feedback. I want to leave the dad human. He's a canibal who feeds his unwitting son and his friends before taking a victim. The son doesn't really suspect anything, since dad doesn't really do anything overtly suspicious. He's a father who wants his son to make friends and sucks at cooking. Pretty standard fare.

As for the police, I don't think it's relevant to the story, and trying to shoehorn it in will only make things crowded. I might add a small mention of officers around the school as a nod to the dosappearance, but that would be it.

The tense might change, but I wanted it to be like the kid is telling the story as it happens, including the details that are relevant to him, and really nothing more. I do have to go back and give the thing a once over for correction purposes.

Thanks again. I have a couple small changes to make, but I'm happy with the positive response.