Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25024572-20151218175352/@comment-25024572-20151228041427

I thank you both for your advice, and shall take it to heart. I also find it funny that you two kind of had almost opposite reactions.

Kinda Awful, you like the writing style, but not the main idea behind the story. (By the way, if you do like my writing style, might I recommend the three other Creepypasta stories I've written, "Amara," "Powerless," and "The Decision," along with my many, many comedy based Riffs?)

And you, Mr. Nash, seem to like the basic idea, but not the writing style (and I do get what you mean by the beginning of the story feeling a bit like a joke. Maybe it's due to the fact that I've written so much comedy that I'm just hard-wired to joke. Or maybe it's just an awkward opening). And you do make some good points, mainly working on making it feel less like a joke, and developing the characters a bit more (I think part of the reason I left the characters undeveloped was because this story just started out as a line of dialogue between two characters to kind of be a bit of a character moment, with no actual bombs falling, and it just kinda grew to what it became).

So, once again, thank you both for your comments on this draft of the story.