Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190212002053/@comment-33904527-20190213220131

BloodySpghetti wrote: Like Locked said, the idea is pretty nice and has that "bigger story" feel to it. Doesn't have to be a longer story. It can stay about this long but it needs some work. You've two soldiers who are trying to take down a sniper by charging at him. Awful idea.

Add some emotional conflict along with actual tactical thought to this little battle and it should work better.

Maybe give some more detailed description of Roger's android inner workings making them seem slightly creepier, kind of like what a human body would do if it could repair itself very quickly. Thank you for the suggestions.