Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25710622-20141118042855/@comment-24101790-20141118044756

A few minor things to start with. Neurons are not a place in the brain. They are a cell that responds to electrical signals. (They have little to nothing to do with generating thoughts/emotional response. That is the Amygdala.)

I deleted the story as there were quite a large number of wording errors "How our mind (should be plural) progressively think of something one after another, imagining thing, dreaming, having emotions and etc.", "wouldn't they (scientist or doctors) have already begin (begun) to create a prototype of a living robot...", "What prove (proof) do they have spreading words across the globe saying that their statements is (are, should be plural) true,...", "This space can be (superfluous word) relate to the...", "What does this space really made of?" etc. A lot of these errors are pretty noticeable and would be caught if the story was proof-read.

Additionally this theory needs some reworking. I would suggest expounding on what you are trying to imply at the end. (How/why should this inspire fear/a feeling of creepiness in the reader?)

The wording errors and lack of evidence to back up the claims (and the scientific facts seem a bit off. Mainly pertaining to neurons and their role in the brain.) really weaken the story, which led to me deleting it for not meeting quality standards.