Talk:Daddy's Little Princess/@comment-25148755-20160114015002

Ok, so way to up the ante with regard to immersion and production value ... combined with your always high level of technical writing this is truly not your grandfathers creepypasta. Now then, on to the story itself. I like that it's a continuation of Clown Dogs and (for obvious reasons since you've read my stuff) love that your establishing a shared universe for your stories. The thing that always impresses me about your writing is that despite the lurid and frankly shocking acts often depicted within (I was as surprised as anyone that one of your stories based on a song titled Pornography didn't warrant an NSFW tag) they're always so goddamn DEEP. I mean, you're analyzing Nietzsche in a story about a chick who gets high on vampire blood before fucking on camera. That's an accomplishment. Regarding plot and everything, I almost wish you weren't capped by the word limit. The technical aspects about deprogramming were interesting as pretty much all your nuts and bolts tangents are, but the ending still ended up feeling just slightly rushed. The story was effective, although not ever really scary, as I never felt the girl was in particular danger from the 'vampire' for lack of a better word, and I was practically rooting for her to eat the fat man at the end. However, those are some fairly minor gripes in what is a well written and welcome addition to your ever growing library of short stories. I predict these are all going to be in a book someday, and all of us who buy a copy will end up on a government watch list somewhere.