Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24839054-20140418075605/@comment-24839054-20140418094019

WaveDivisionMultiplexer wrote:

FoxyGrandpa13 wrote:

WaveDivisionMultiplexer wrote: for an 'Alice in wonderland'/'through the looking glass' theory, this seems okay. Maybe if you read the book and add more to the story. Also, it isn't exactly creepy. The first bit was cool. But the rest could be modified without elements like 'rabbit with no eyes'; I don't like the bit where things get gory for the sake of it. You can go ahead and design a wonderland, really, and I'm sure we'd be okay with it as long as it's well written, got no cliche elements, and is a credible theory for the book itself.

Bottom line: good 'nuff Where was the Rabbit with no eyes or gore? the only part that was sorta gore-ish was the eyeball getting eaten.

Also thank you :D i apreciate some constructive critiscm I was referring to stories that have unnecessary gore. What I wanted to say was, your story is good. If you're going to add to it, make sure it doesn't have a rabbit with no eyes.

Er, I suppose I should have been more clear. Oh

my bad :/