Talk:The Other Eighty Percent of the Brain/@comment-26400958-20150518152216

The concept was good, ending was more or less sound. It was missing something, I'm not sure what and aside from some major and minor errors (that I have since fixed) the story was alright. Keep writing man but next time if you aren't sure on a word just google it. It always pulls up the proper spelling and definition plus has an example of how to properly use it. Additionally, one of the other commentors said something along the lines of "if there was any shread of truth it would be scarier". Its fanfic-horror man. If you came here for science you've got a really rude awakening waiting for you. It's fiction, the science doesn't really need to be plausible as long as the writing is good enough, it's called "willfull suspension of disbelief." It's one of the reasons movies and video games are so popular despite lacking any and all basis in science. I'd give it a 6/10, keep working man, you've got the spark, just need more practice.