Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9584883-20141212152912/@comment-4849011-20141213011607

I agree that "wife" shouldn't be capitalized - at least, not on its own. Either make it lowercase (the wife, the kid, the pride) or make "kid" and "pride" capitalized too (the Wife, the Kid, the Pride) to call attention to them. That way all three have the same weight. Likewise, have either "Fear was for the enemy, fear and bullets" or "Fear was for the enemy, Fear and Bullets" (I'd recommend the former).

I thought this did a good job of setting the scene and establishing the character. You provided some background information in addition to establishing his guy's thinking and attitude. The flashbacks to the past gave him a human touch. I also found the part about "The familiar metallic taste of the colt 45" to be jolting.