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Fair point on parts: I think only time I mentioned that was Arthur's cheeks being rosey in the cold. I can add more bits of that. There's not deep snow as historically winter in the region was relatively fair and the common stories of Valley Forge being covered in snow are misconstrued, and it wouldn't have even been exceedingly cold. Good points on the starvation and worn-out uniforms, I can work on that. Tell me more about improv, not sure what you mean by that.

Fair point on awe, that can be switched out from dumbstruck or shocked. Generally I've heard and seen awe used to reference wonder fear and wonder in equal measure. That wording can be changed.

My thoughts are the coat would've been stolen by the creature as means of sneaking around without notice. I think it should also lose its hat in the scuffle, maybe it moves so quickly the hat falls off, I think I forgot the creature was wearing it. I could detail the coat to maybe be an officer's coat.