Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26113663-20141222073904/@comment-26507180-20141226105241

Think of your parabels. " The dense rain drops fell from the clouds like heavy metal balls..." Why not talk about hail storms?

"The thunder roared at everyone pretending like a fierce lion..." just doesn't work for me.

Your numbers are sometimes off ("A massive tsunami hit every shores and cities it could reach"), but that is propably do to what you said above.

Finally, what you said. The story could be interesting but needs more work.