Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5034925-20140409181725/@comment-5946174-20140410212759

Agentskintaker wrote: If your feedback includes the words lame or pornography (which is half the stuff on this site), then it isn't worth my time. I hoped that it would be, but I should have known better. Dictionary.com defines pornography as "obscene writings, drawings, photographs, or the like, especially those having little or no artistic merit." This is precisely what I meant when I referred to your story as such. It's one thing if sex plays an important role in your story, like in The Black Dog and Goat, but it was just added here as a cheap attempt to shock the audience. Here is an example of where explicit sexual content is acceptable:

"Tenderly, I laid her down. "Please, no. Please, please. You're just a kid, he's fucked you up. It's not your fault, it's not your fault. This isn't right. I can get you help. Please. Please. Oh, God, please." She was the first woman I ever touched with my own flesh. So beautiful and soft. I pressed the mouth of the goat mask against hers, jammed my tongue toward the tiny mouth slit, trying to taste her lip. She sobbed. Clumsily, I put myself inside her. My father had shown me movies, old, grainy films projected onto the side of the car, to teach me about carnality."

Do you see the difference?