Talk:Closet Monsters/@comment-28060931-20170201173732

I knew that Stephen King wasn't the thing corrupting my mind! Just knew it! You ain't got shit on this, ma, monsters corrupted my mind, not porn. And it's not an addiction, it's a healthy obsession.

Jokes aside, I liked the story. I thought you might cut it down a bit, it can be shorter than it is, but, overall, it was good.

"Timmy said, his voice showing signs of him holding back tears." I'm no authority in being good at writing, but I think "..signs of held back tears" would flow and sound better.

"A creak sounded off behind Tim’s dad, sending a wave of goosebumps up his spine," of whose spine? They're both likely candidates to be freaked out. I'd say the dad because the sentence begins with him, but Tim was the only one who displayed fear beforehand.

It was a good story, but I would reccomend picking out some small errors. You posted it pretty quickly so there always will be some fluff(filler) words here and there. I'd edit them, but they're not obvious mistakes and you might have put them in for a reason.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this story. Great work, mate.