Talk:Peer into the Unknown/@comment-27716587-20160201170036

The cliche of 'peer into the unknown' is a little annoying. -.1 Slight punctuation errors through the story. -.1 It was kind of predictable that the girlfriend would be dead once Nathan couldn't find her. -.4 Sort of cliffhanger ending. How did the girlfriend die? What happened to her? What exactly did the old hag do? There's more questions than answers. -.4 Final Score: 9.0 This is a pretty good story. The suspense is held throughout, never knowing (for the most part) what's going to happen. The mystery of what is going on being slowly revealed is something I generally enjoy in a story. Keep up the good work. -Sam