Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27493054-20160905213025

Hi. I had been screwing around in GTAV when I got an idea for a story, although, I need feedback.

2046. The US government used San Francisco as an base of operations for a secret experiment, codenamed POWERDOGS. The experiment had a subject, a convicted criminal, who was subjected to a special DNA-altering machine, which could make anyone subjected a superhuman, theoretically. Something went wrong in the procedure, and the subject was killed. While government agents were searching for a subject which could handle the pressure of DNA altering, someway, somehow, the machines gave power to the criminal's invisible spirit, and, through a blinding flash, he was manifested into the physical world, as a patch of black smoke, which took the shape of a human. Through telekinesis, teleportation, and all sorts of non-physical power, he slaughtered all agents, security and personnel of the lab.

As the phantom, calling himself Walker, emerges from the facility, he sees San Francisco, a city full of life. Fear me all, he thought. It was simple. Through a few otherworldly tricks in a period of 2 months, he managed to scare off each and every one of them. One of the greatest cities in all of America, now turned into the largest ghost town in the world. All that remained were a few vehicles, some intact, some wrecked, the buildings, tidy and clean, exactly as they left them, and deadly silence, except for the occasional blow of the wind and weather conditions.

Three young vandals, Lee, Rob, and Amy, visit the abandoned city in search for loot. But The Walker is still here, and he will do everything in its disposal to drag them back to Hell - as slow and as painful as possible. 