Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4499225-20150304215005/@comment-24976741-20150304220529

Good, good.

I saw what you were going to do with whole mermaid type thing, but after that ya once again got me goat!

From just reading to the part were he was being saved I thought it was going to be kinda like a first hand experience with one of those mermaid sailor tales, but nope! I was wrong.

It was interesting in my opinion and by far does a good job on the first try compared to most stroies on the workshop. I could play this hand you've laid down, well done. I do just have to say, the whole him turning into one of them kind of thing, ya that was pretty predictable. Other than that, I say it's passable for being the length of a story it is. Could do for more, but I feel like that would probably ruin the story.