Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180813062343/@comment-5733573-20180819072504

It's even better the second time around. I feel silly that I didn't catch this before, but Piorah's taking him through the seven deadly sins, isn't she? That's really brilliant.

It's very nearly ready for the wiki. Really all it needs is some tedious clean-up. I know you're sick of me saying it, but proofreading this again would be a good idea. Specifically there seem to be a couple missing words, punctuation marks, and flipping verb tenses in a couple of places.

Also, I want to point out a punctuation rule. When a single, unbroken quote goes on for longer than one paragraph, you don't need to add the closing quotation marks at the end of each paragraph. The quotes should only be closed when the quote ends. You do, however, still need to use opening quotation marks at the beginning of each paragraph the quote contains. Here's an example:

Jillian said, "This quote is really long.  I goes on for at least two paragraphs.

''"By the way, have you seen Stella?  I need to return the book I borrowed from her." She rolled her eyes and flipped her hair coquettishly.''

It's a weird rule, but a rule none the less. Anyway, once these small things are cleared up, I'd say it's ready. Nice job!