Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25024572-20160610170146/@comment-25569708-20160613011934

Hey there Dorkpool, this is a pretty funny script you have here. Before I get started on the story itself, I just wanted to point out that "DWANE “THE ROCK” JOHNSON" is misspelled, "DWANE" needs to be "DWAYNE".

I'm not very familiar with your Riffs, but judging from what you have here they must be pretty humorous. From the minute the Rock started talking about summoning demons, I knew that it was going to be good. I really like the idea of Dwayne Johnson incomprehensibly appearing in an anti-demon-summoning PSA for God-knows-what purposes. I think I laughed a lot harder at the egg part than I should have. The whole thing was pretty much good imo, except that the convo between Jeremy and the emo kid could probably use a couple more jokes thrown in for good measure, there just seems to be a bit too much back-and-forth currently. Not a big problem. Finally, I feel like some final funny thing could happen to the Rock at the end, instead of it just ending on him like it does now. I think you're more than capable of figuring that out though.

As a final note, I'm not really sure if this would be accepted onto this wiki, as you have mentioned. I have a feeling you may have to take it up with an admin. Anyways, good job here, thanks for the laughs.