Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24883632-20140509220318/@comment-24883632-20140513211334

Noothgrush wrote: A lot of sentence fragments, you need to use colons and semicolons in a couple places. I agree, the ending is cool, but I think the most glaring issue is the drawer thing. There's a lot about this that doesn't work. I have a very big clothes drawer at the bottom of my bed that I can climb in. How does this not work?