Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26067056-20170716174602/@comment-7064562-20170717054426

Oh hi I'm Micheal, I'm just your average everyday young adult. Doing random things like a normal person would do. I have a friend named James, We have been best friends since 3rd Grade. The reason I'm mentioning him is because Me and James because we did something stupid.

I have a thing where if the first paragraph in a story under or near 500 words has several errors, I don't put in the effort to read the rest, as it's clear the author didn't put in any effort himself.

- James and I

- the sentence is bad and has "because" way too many times.

- The word after a , is not capitalized.

- First sentence has poor grammar and poor word choices.

- Random things like a normal person would do needs examples as it's to subjective to get a clear view on the character. To me it could be normal to eat dead babies, so does that imply he likes eating dead babies?