Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-13937974-20150819113322/@comment-25037895-20150822003437

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"babysitting for her step dad(')s friend"

(")help yourself :)("). (Single quotation marks should only be used for monologue.)

" “Don't mind if I do” she thought to "

" “It(')s unfair” she growled "

" trying to rationalize the sound(.) “It must "

" maybe it(')s the owners cat trying to get in,” she told herself. "

I would think a novel would be more drawn out in the early stages. As far as short stories go, this one seems a bit weak as there is nothing really adding suspense. It has a bit of an eerie atmosphere, but there should be more events going on outside the window, or more events inside to build suspense.