Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25021361-20140604044739/@comment-25050660-20140615220505

Hm. Your story is confusing my brain. At first, I thought, hey, this sounds good. I thought it was about demons or something until I read on, and was like what? What's going on in this story? You need to clarify the plot, the conflict, and the particular characters in the story. Even the ones inside the MC's head. More description! More description! More description! But not where it drowns the story in a pool of blood.