Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160707143147/@comment-27838637-20160711111246

Ok people, the story has been updated. I fixed all mechanical errors that were previously mentioned, and added a few sentences and paragraphs, expanding the story by roughly 500 words.

Please tell me what you think of this updated version!

Also, I was considering making the dog-torture scene a lot more brutal; but I'm not sure if that would detract from the story. I think it might make the kills seem more justified if the torture of the dog is more explicit; but it might not even be neccessary, and I don't want to make the story voilent for the sake of being violent.

A_O.