Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20140912193527/@comment-25170312-20140913201135

Before I post this for real, I'd really like some feedback on the ending. That's the part I'm having trouble with. I think this ending is more subtle and open-ended than the first one without adding too much of an epilogue (look at the first ending here if you want to). I'm not set on the wording of the final paragraph either. Thoughts please! XD