Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25825682-20150629034432/@comment-25980905-20150630225739

Honestly, I don't generally critique poems but this has been here for a day. Let's begin, shall we?

Overall

So, usually I have three sections in a review (one for the good parts, one for the bad parts and one for the overall conclusion) but today I am just going to skip to the end for reasons I will explain in a moment.

Poetry is subjective. Because of its subjectivity it is very difficult to critique, much more difficult than short stories. So, therefore, I will be judging more on the literary techniques rather than the overall content.

Your use of rhyme and enjambment throughout the poem was pleasurable to the eye. However, at points it feels as though you have used enjambment just to get the right word for a rhyme (this had the disasterous effect of me not being able to find the rhythm). I didn't feel like there was a rhythm to the poem, which lead to my subsequent disinterest (though my disinterest may have also come from the fact that poems are subjective and this one's content didn't generally interest me). Your use of language was great and I am overjoyed to see one with such an extended vocabulary; it was one of the things that kept me reading. I noticed a limited amount of personification throughout the text and there was a very low (if not, no) use of similes or metaphors, which was disappointing. Overall, I can't really judge this as good or bad; though the literature itself was good and well written.

Anyway, that's the best I can do on the topic of poems; good luck and farewell.