Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33077235-20180926023609/@comment-35711173-20180926173539

Simon Slaughters,

Start with the obvious one. Learn how to clean up your use of the English language. Then always do it before you post anything here, even a reply.

The Grammarly clean-up that L0CKED334 performed didn't fix verb tense errors. Read that first paragraph very carefully. Note the tense of your verbs.

"The tall figure said (PAST) nothing but reached (PAST) out his hand stopping it in front of the little boy. As the little boy put (PRESENT) his palm in the tall man’s hand he is (PRESENT) pulled up to his feet. The man bends (PRESENT) down close to the boy. The man’s face couldn’t (PAST) be seen because the cloak only showed (PAST) darkness where his face would be."

That's just part of one paragraph. You've got to get your verb tense to be uniform or it's very hard to understand. Forget someone having suspension of disbelief when they are working to decipher the story.

You need to stand up and take ownership of your composition in the English language.

Dr. Bob