Talk:Psychologist/@comment-29597457-20160812034010

This is one of the worst pastas that exists BUT if you completely discount it's existence and read the Prequil as it's own stand-alone thing, that's actually pretty excellent.

I read the prequil first (mistakenly assuming it was written first after finding my way to this pasta and seeing it had a "before this one") and I thoroughly enjoyed how the prequil really was written as though it was for the writer of the note. Things were "poorly" explained, but only such that they were not written for outside eyes, they were written fort he fictional author of the note. It gave it a little more realism and let you fill in the blanks yourself a bit, which I feel is an underrated consideration when writing "found footage/diary/documents" type pasta.

I immediately read this after and was immensely disappointed for many of the reasons another commenter touched on, so there's no need for me to go there.

The author of this is someone I'd be happy to read from again though. My criticism of things tends to be harsh, but I'd like to think it's not unjust and not without a nod to the good.

I noticed the author had commented that this was his first attempt, and indeed it is wracked with clichés and comes off a little rushed. But whoever wrote this clearly has sat down at some point and used their brain, and that hasn't gone unnoticed.

If you ever see fit to re-write the events following Starving Dog's, I certainly believe your writing has and is improving, and I'm confident you are capable of writing something I would be both fascinated and entralled with.

Gonna go with; Keep it up, but this particular pasta is really, really, very, very bad/10.