Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-38854728-20200213233009/@comment-24101790-20200213234353

As I was the one who deleted your story, I figured I'd give some examples of the capitalization, awkward wording, and plot issues which resulted in me deciding to remove your story. Please be aware that an appeal needs to be passed if you plan on re-uploading your story. Editing it and re-posting it will result in its deletion and a temporary ban as per the message on your talk page.

Capitalization issues: You tend to forget to capitalize sentences properly and randomly capitalize words incorrectly. "essays. she (She) was still trying to feed her brain some knowledge, Like (like) a toddler refusing to eat spinach.", "It was almost time for High School (high school) when Lauren heard a knock on the door.", "floor. the (The) bloody knives went penetrating into the back of her head, Piercing (piercing) her.", etc.

Awkward wording: "The knocking was gradually getting louder as she slowly walked each step of her foot.", "Before May 6, Lauren was in her Classroom, sitting in a blue chair while her Spanish teacher was lecturing her hungry students." , "Hoping for school to end.", "She quickly reached for the doorknob and unsealed the door when she got greeted by a gust of wind.", etc. I would suggest reading your story aloud to yourself to catch these numerous instances of awkward wording.

Plot issues: There is very little build up here and creation of tension. In the end, the story comes off as bland due to the lack of any real audience investment.

Plot issues cont.: Perhaps the biggest issue is the lack of purpose. Why is the audience engaged here? It ends up being a girl going to school and then getting impaled with knives without any real sense of reason or motive. In the end, it makes the ending feel tacked on, random, and interchangeable with any number of endings due to its lack of influence on the rest of the story.

There are other issues here, but I think this is enough of a starting point for explaining why your story wasn't up to our quality standards and suggestions for areas where you could improve.