Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26900569-20150825232818/@comment-26900569-20150826030139

AMarbleHornet wrote: You have paragraphing problems here, as it's just a BIT too big for my mind to process. There was a spacing error and a spelling error or two, but besides that, you have your average pokepasta. If these are allowed now, I would still suggest avoiding them if you wish to take your pastas seriously. Pokepastas, while generally earning rave reviews by the younger population (anyone 12-13 & under, I find), it rarely makes a connection with the mature community. I'm also unsure if lost games/cartridges/etc are still accepted on this wiki, although I'm sorry if this is a false thought. I'm sorry, but I think you need to do ALOT of work on this is you'd like to salvage a good story. I appreciate your professional feedback. Actually, this is a story that I want to take seriously, and not just a cheap, cheesy strory for the younger audience (or at least, that wont be my intention). Also, this was meant to just be a summery of a concept and not the whole story, so naturally I had it all in one paragraph, but I do understand the slight mispellings and errors here and there. Like I said, this a thing I was planning on writing for some time now and I really want to make it into a good story, I'm just not that great with summeries without going too much into detail about it. I just don't see what's so wrong with that.