Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25394259-20140908012436/@comment-5619531-20140908014045

When it says "What other kind of animal could continue living in the pit, alone and ceaselessly gliding across the rough soil." I would put a question mark after soil.

Other than that, I like the description that you used. There was nothing wrong with it (other than what I have said). I think it's good, and I think that you should post it on the main site. But I would wait and see if other people agree with my view on it.