Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30157838-20180530023530/@comment-9041013-20180531104557

Honestly, I couldn't even read through the whole thing because it's so slooooooooooooow and heavy. Being this slooooooooooooooooow and heavy even from the beginning doesn't bring a sense of suspence as much as it does a sense of "Is this going anywhere?"

If you are trying to make this into a novella or a novel, sure, guess I'm just being picky and or lazy here.

I just couldn't read through it all.

Anyhow, from what I've gathered through the introduction and the first muse; you've great descriptiory bits - awesome, detailed descriptions of things, the way things should be. At points.

Anywho, the story over all is nice, Henry is burnt out, and while he gets some sort of muse and some solution to his block, but his fatigue eventually catches up to him. I do think the outter world in the story is pretty realistic, dunno how much every good writer would pull a Van Gogh over a mental block (ei neglecting to live out of his study sufficiently) but sure, it could be a possibility and since its a story, thats lovely.

Here's a thing I do not like, plot wise, it's this cliche of a genie type of person who drives the story. The stranger in the street that is. If it is a one time thing throughout the plot, I have not too much of a deal with it, but if cliches keep on springing through the story, try to trim them out, or smooth them out so well they gain some originality.

Considering you've a gotten a lot of work and consideration in this piece, so I'll just assume you've done a good job overall, and I'm just not into this one.