User blog comment:SorrowPasta/Top 10 CreepyPasta "No No's"/@comment-25477067-20150330162759

Before you read my review, please note that everything I say is SUBJECTIVE, and if you dissagree, you can just ignore me.

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This seems very familiar...did I write this? :D

Anyway,  I think you did a better job on your list than I did on mine. I like the fact that you keep you generalizations to a minimum, unlike mine. I agree with you almost all of these points, but I have to point out that about 4 of these are pretty much saying the same thing. A JTK formula is a rip-off, and is, by definition, unoriginal and kills off people early. I do admit that killing off people is prevalent in most new stories, but that JTK is the worst offender, and the one you mention. I think that if you mentioned JTK once and incorperated all 4 of these points into one bullet instead of refering to it three-four times, your list would be more effective.

Also, if you mention not using hyper-realistic in stories, you probably should also add in some of the other major cliches, such as bleeding eyes, vomiting from fear and "Don't look behind you"  or "You're next!!!1" In my opinion, the worst offender is not hyperrealistic eyes, but the all-knowing journal entries that really kill a story. Keep this to a single bullet point, or maybe make sub-bullet points?

Other things IN MY OPINION, I think you missed was the gore factor. I am not talking about the standard, "His arm was ripped off in a shower of blood and it was gross!!!!!!11" But more of the "Jeff the Killer buried the chainsaw in her chest, coating the area in blood. Sickening squelching sounds filled the room as he rooted around in her chest cavity. He reached in and picked out her instestines, hanging from the rafters like confetti. He licked the eyeballs clean, and then fed he limbs to the emaciated children hanging from the meat hooks in the slaughterhouse."

That sort of stuff doesn't make the story better, only makes me look for a trashcan and never come back to that story.

Hope these ideas help imrove your list!

SOURCECODE01 (talk) 16:27, March 30, 2015 (UTC)