Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20180615015311/@comment-33937557-20180615111554

Moth: Not Even Once.

Yeah, um, so much for no catches. I thank you for not outright saying "if you screw this up, you die. Have fun with that," during each portion, (Holders). The idea is cool: go through many different types of hells to reach the ultimate Zone of Silence. I enjoy the variety in each place- some are more severe than others- and the monster being the guy who's "gonna break your legs," persuasive.

The part with the molten doorknobs made me cringe, I got a clear mental image of the skin bubbling: no, you made me get a sense for everything else, too, all the good and bad things like the field of dandelions. Atmospheric. I won't further elaborate on the part which influenced my earlier joke. I don't think I really need to. Have to get your protein somehow, right?

And you'd have me at the "jumping into a deep dark pit" part.

School, man. I know it.

Well at least you ended this first half at a decent place, not at a comma or in the middle of a sentence.

I 'be' on 'lookout' for 2nd Half.