Talk:Booty Call/@comment-25024572-20160613180507/@comment-27593636-20160613191701

Thanks for giving it a read! Any similarities between this story and the Jeff the killer one weren't intetional, which is probbably why no one else noticed them. I think the comparison is probbably stretching it a bit, although you might just be seeing patterns I'm not.

In my initial write out, the plotpoints I'd highlighted didn't seem obvious enough, so yeah I didn't think people would notice them. It may come across as spoon-feeding the reader, but I thought that was better than it going over everyone's head. That said, if I had the chance to re-do the story the ending would be the thing which I most heavily edited.

As for the voices, Zoe was meant to be a very unreliable narrator. What she belives is happening and what's actually happening are of two completely different things.

I do feel like I shot myself in the foot with the ending, a bit. It may not have been a gorefest, but I'm  not sure the alternative was much better. Live and learn, I suppose.

Thank  you very much for such in-depth feedback, I really  do appreciate it. It really helps me to  ensure that the next story is of a higher quality.