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The truth is that now it is hard to make a scary story about an .exe

And well, sorry to say this but you didn't succeed. I feel that it is too undetailed and somewhat random. In some parts it looks like it is gory for no reason.

Besides, the last line..."Play smile.exe or I will come to lick the blood off your dead corpse :p" it was the final blow to the story. The emoticon makes it look like a joke message one would send to a friend about a game, you know, in jest.

Sorry to say it, but that story definitely can be improved. Don't worry, it is matter of practice! Try to think what would scare you in that situation and try to imprint what you feel into the story.

I hope that you continue writing.