Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24708169-20140324010721/@comment-24694408-20140324175230

Overall the Pasta was decent. It was well written, with no obvious mistakes and the sentences and vocabulary flowed well.

However, I had a few issues with it.

I am a fan of realistic Creepypasta and I think you can tell this isn't very realistic. It was kinda creepy at the beginning but once the whole thing with Drake chasing the bus happened, it really lost the suspense.

And, if I'm perfectly frank with you, I didn't like the ending very much. The fact he just kills his mother and sits there was very rushed and didn't seem original. Also, how the hell did he post or even write this to put on the internet. I get that it's just a story but a creepypasta must have at least a little realism. (This is a common problem with a lot of pastas though, so it's not a personal problem)

Sorry about the opinions being generally negative but it wasn't one of my favourites. It wasn't terrible though and was well written.

Hope this helps

Bluebunglebee