Talk:Personal Demons/@comment-25052433-20150724210552/@comment-26423665-20150725090423

132: That's not a bad score for this "offering". Thanks for the review as well. Now the contest's over I'll go over it once again, trim some of the fat (as I've mentioned elsewhere I seem to have a habit of using ten words where three would do), work on character development and I've already got a better ending in mind since you mentioned it. Should have a rework of this up with said improvements sometime soon.

I can use everything you've mentioned to make my future works more engaging too so thanks again.