Talk:The Abandoned Railway/@comment-25471033-20190102202759

As most creepypastas, and lots of stories as well, do, this one had a strong and promising beginning and fell flat on its face at the end. It was so rushed, starting with walking up to the guy and hearing him hiss and get mad at the kid for what his people did. Everything after that should be looked at, and probably added on to, maybe even forfeited entirely. However, everything before this was done really well. The detail wasn't exactly specific, but it was enough to be able to get inside the story, and also become annoyed with how much of a baby Jonny really is. 6/10