Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5299148-20140407165309

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Lockup?title=Lockup&cb=2453

My second pasta that I've posted on this site (my first is gone for some reason but I didn't like it anyways). I never usually like what I write, but I feel more confident in this one. Questions? Comments? Suggestions? 