Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-6144667-20151230044644/@comment-6144667-20160103181304

I appreciate the feedback. Most of the corrections you made up top were unintentional though short-shorts are actually a thing. I figured the dialogue would need work. It's something I really want to improve on. I think the charatcer arc I have for Mike will make him a more interesting character but conveying it through dialogue is tough for me. The lawyer stuff will be fleshed out later. I was a lot more focused on writing another part of the story which led me to keeping Mike there so long. I now realize that it's just silly. Thank you for reviewing this.