Talk:Bunnies/@comment-4470175-20160625004610

Not sure what to think. It's definitely well written and the story is clearly explained. The story is pretty good overall, different to other things I have read. The way you used gore and fright in this is actually quite impressive. It's a weird way of torturing children, but not one to be disregarded. If I had to pick fault, like a lot of creepypastas, it goes nowhere. The plot becomes kind of redundant once everything comes together. It's all just a bit like 'oh yeah this happened.' There's no motivation or background for the killer, but I suppose this could add to the mystery. The religious reference at the end was honestly completely unnecessary. The ending, as in the final sentence, had many implications so I don't know whether to praise or criticise.

Good ideas, composed well, but once you reach the end, the redundance becomes apparent and you're wondering about questions the writer should be avoiding.

6/10