Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-11243334-20180608081220/@comment-24101790-20180608122814

I'd advise looking over my message on your talk page as some of those issues (mainly the issues with leaving punctuation outside of dialogue)

The story feels very similar to other creepypastas (man meets up with someone online for a date, only to realize they're unstable/monsters) and doesn't due much to break away from the others. The characters are pretty unbelievable (Ms. 1956, the protagonist, and the Doctor Yuron, who violates doctor-patient confidentiality at the drop of a hat.) as well. Additionally there really isn't good build-up to the climax and the lack of description/character input really weakens the story.

Finally, as you've posted this story before and had it deleted for not being up to quality standards, I would make sure you go through the proper channels this time as simply re-posting it is going to likely result in its deletion and a temporary ban. You need to make a deletion appeal, but first, I would strongly recommend revising the story.