Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24918243-20140612053158/@comment-24918243-20140613162700

Read it more carefully. It is plainly stated that the girl is 8. Plus her mom is the one feeding her breakfast.

Also I would say the imp is more "influencing" then controlling the mom. Neighbor's do: the father is not a social butterfly by any stretch of the imagination. Plus think about how well you are aware of things happening to your neighbors? I know I have lived in the same house for 6 years, and there are about 2 neighbors in the entire neighborhood that I even know their names.

As far as the cat, sure it made it obvious something was up. But the final showdown was on the same night.

I know there is still a lot that needs to be done to this story. But I think the father is one of the points that is working. And again, I think the main reason for the dad not putting two and two together is because he is simply aloof like many parents are. Same as a parent who does not know their kid is getting involved with drugs until it's too late.

What is keeping me from publishing it at this point is just that I think it need some development into where the imp's good deeds start going sour (culminating on the dog episode) and how he goes on doing his "reign of terror".