User blog comment:HumboldtLycanthrope/The 666 word pasta write off!/@comment-25073641-20160408053956/@comment-26475800-20160408163644

Just wanted to give you a little feedback on this one. I found some things confusing, like this fragment here: "ten-thirty-four in the midnight." I don't know if it is midnight or 10:30.

This is a little confusing too: "which made the houses look empty instead of inhabited. But it was, only they were sleeping." Just the wording makes it feel a little clunky and strange.

The concept is good, it reminded me a little of The Screwfly Theory, from Masters of Horror. But there were a few thing that took me out of the story. I stay up late all the time and only get a few hours of sleep each night, so that 10:30 and later was considered the middle of the night really took me out of it. If it was 1:30 it would make much more sense.

I liked the ending, again nothing new, but I wasn't expecting it and that is a plus. With the word count being what it is and the difficulty of writing something with an exact word count, this was well done.