Talk:Overtoun Bridge/@comment-24466828-20151103161906

This story started off okay. Also, good job basing this off a real bridge. This is actualy based off of a real bridge where dogs have jumped to their deaths. This story gets some credibility because of that.

However, I think that you should've used a better ending. The ending to this felt so abrupt and it really wasn't that scary.

Also for some reason, I burst out laughing when I read this line: "I looked at the person and screamed "What the fuck!?"" For some reason, it felt very cheesy to me.

Lastly, I felt that this story was more intended to shock then to scare the reader.

I'll give this 2.5/10.