Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10319977-20151014231140/@comment-24881871-20151015114826

It's kind of difficult not to be vague since your pastas are all but two sentences, the one exception being Life of LIes. When I said you could snip the first copule sentences from just about any pasta, I was referring to how a lot of people will draw in their readers with a dramatic statement. Almost all of these look like a hook that will catch the person's attention before you dive into the pasta itself. But you cut it off there, and it just looks awkward. I've commented on your individual pastas before in the deletion appeal, so there's really no use in getting more specific than that.