Talk:Eye of the Beholder/@comment-31077845-20170121171807

Around here normally I'd say we aim for either creepy or disturbing. This struck me as simply gruesome, and really not even that gruesome. In fact obsession with extreme self mutilation is probably something you can find not uncommonly if you look through psych wards for the severely mentally ill. Thus this wasn't really disturbing, creepy, or interesting, there are no twists, and it insists on being drawn out endlessly when it can be summed up with perhaps 2 sentences; girl believes jealousy brings her bad luck. She becomes obsessed with extreme self mutilation. It's not just that this has a poor hook to keep the reader interested; it simply has no hook at all. It just sits there staring at us, waiting for us to get bored and leave.

I kind of hope that wasn't overly harsh crticism, but this read as nothing further than the violent fantasies of a teenager, and the only person who needs to hear that is a therapist.