Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28060931-20160506143219/@comment-26407997-20160518013150

Hey,jake!

So,I think that you did a pretty good job on the darker tone.It helps bring out the misery of the disease(and the cure!)

Again,the plot is great,and you really do have a good take on the otherwise cliche story of a disease that destroys humanity.

However,I didn`t like your change to the plot.The idea of him making a second cure which is lethal just seems bland to me.

I liked your idea of sciety bcoming so desperate for a cure that it ruins society,in the first version,just for the narrator to explain exactly why he felt so guilty on it.