Talk:Closer

This pasta had potential, but it was butchered by atrocious grammar and an ending that was completely irrelevant to the rest of the story. Also, the whole "and den i wokez up lol" concept is critically overused. Approximately 1 in 4 sentences were dependent clauses without an independent clause to finish the thought. You repeatedly confused the words "were" and "was," and you made the age-old mistake of using "to" instead of "too." This pasta is too long for me to correct all of the grammatical errors, but I will try to fix at least half of it. I'll give a 5/10, but it needs a lot of work before it can be called a true creepypasta.