Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26425680-20171018131639/@comment-26399604-20171018174857

Wow, that's one way to start an introduction, immediately pulling me in. I also think you chose a good time period for the topic that felt pretty organic with the characters.

All-in-all, I don't have much to say against it; this was a good story. Good luck in the contest!

I did note a few areas that could use some attention:

+The [painful his moaning] began yet again as the sun beat down on him.

--Did you mean, "The painful moaning" or "The pain in his moaning"?

+Victor lowered his arms dejectedly, and both [the man and boy remained in the cool night air.]

--Did you mean, "the man and boy remained silent/still in the cool air"?

+[]Victor scratched his head. “What do you want with a belt? How can it help you?”

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