Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20150306110837/@comment-25941663-20150306214448

If it's not much trouble, could you give me a few examples of bad sentences? I will re-read the story if I am to post it on the main site, but still, could use some help.

I agree that this story isn't the most logical story out there. Personally though, as long as there are no plotholes involved, I have no problem with stuff randomly happening. In (almost) every story out there, stuff 'randomly' happens simply because the world is a bad place. Not every story needs fleshed out villains with realistic motives and deep personalities.

But I understand where you are coming from and thanks for the review.