Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25900635-20141221231439/@comment-25945479-20150102073216

The only problems I see with this story are the repetitive use of commas and as he stated, the 'experiment' way of thinking. Though the comma ideal doesn't really bother me, some are quick to point out flaws in it's usage. Just be sure they are used correctly I myself saw no errors though I could be wrong.

Also, I do agree that the narrator probably wouldn't refer to these as subjects/experiments but more perhaps something of a curse or judgement. It's simply an idea seeing as how he was a religious man and always referring to the 'devil'.

Over all I give this 9/10. My favorite setting and part of the story definitely had to be the people in the glass cubicles. That's what really drew me and made me want to read more. After all, why would people confine themselves to such a small space?