Board Thread:Hello Everyone! I'm New Here/@comment-7166519-20130315165256/@comment-4750363-20130315171819

I corrected every spelling and grammar mistake you made.

But it is an awesome story! I liked it a lot. Pretty good, for a first pastza. I wonder what other things you'll write.

The only thing I didn't like was the ending, everything that was in italics. The "ALL OF YOU ARE NEXT" thing is too cliché. When done correctly it is a good thing, but in your story...eh, I think it could have been better.

But the rest of the story turns it into a minor detail, so propos to you for creating something that is good.