Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180622074808/@comment-9041013-20180622155030

SoDaft Potato wrote: Nothing I can say that hasn't been said: Twist was nice but kinda predictable, descriptions of work environment were well done because you actually work in places like those, Italicize, add a little bit more gristle.

Please do develop the lead's drive to kill, why he does it, as pointed out before, that's what really stuck out to me.

And that car... just... that car and the soda bottles... my mother would go into shock.

Yes, there were grammar errors, though minor. One I will point out: "52-year-old" should be hyphenated. Have you watched American Psycho? That kind of people have a logical motivation. Just like you have an itch that bothers you, they have an itch that requires them to hurt others - however if it's written better, or in a dark comic sense it could be great.