Talk:The Cat/@comment-24281984-20160108170907

I'm glad to see you're still writing stories after I enjoyed the first two I read from you. Although I definitely don't think this pasta was perfect, there are a lot of good things in it and I did genuienly enjoy reading it.

First, the twist with the cat actually being a robot isn't something I've ever seen before, nor did I see it coming, so that element of surprise helped it to actually feel frightening. On top of that, you did a pretty good job making your protagonist act like a normal human being would, and the entire story itself is quite well-written, which was the best part for me. You have enough detail to keep readers engaged and yet not so much it slows down the pacing.

The issues I have with this are pretty minor ones. I would have been interested to know who made the android cat and why they would leave their invention out in the open for anyone to take it, but since it's the premise of the story I guess I can let that go. The dialogue also isn't great, I don't think someone would stammer that much if they weren't in immediate danger. I would correct this by either taking it out completely or making the MC speak a little more steadily.

All in all, while a little slow to start and the slight rush to the ending are still here, I think this is a good story with an original and genuienly scary twist. I'd reccomend anyone who hasn't read it yet to give it a try and see what they think.