Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29709755-20160912195631/@comment-25547916-20160914181747

Pretty good. It was cool how you intercut the report with the dialog and I really liked the juxtaposition of them eating and the bodyhorror of the 'raisin' itself. Only suggestion I might make is to cut off the ending revelation, the '27 Aug:'-part. I get what it's going for, but in my opinion it just felt a bit cheesy compared to the rest of the story. All around one of the better stories I've seen on the workshop, nice job.