Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27080023-20151015114153/@comment-27080023-20151112233021

Thank you very much. I know I have been a little pushy for feedback but  I worked so hard on this and needed to know that the story itself was not awful. Do you know what though, the original story had a LOT of commas in that I removed after becoming paranoid after reading the page about comma splices. I catually went through the story and removed the commas. It is my own fault as I am not an expert in punctuation. I will go over the story and re add them and proof read and then re post here before I attempt to submit the story again, and I appreciate that you will tell me if the story actually works when you have time to do that. Thank you very much.