Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20161204163004/@comment-24101790-20161205192219

"The surrounding darkness enveloping the town was partially lit as the moonlight kept on penetrating the night's sky; illuminating several of the houses throughout the neighborhood. Some of the residents who were awoken by the sight," Here's a bit of an issue. I'm assuming you mean the moonlight is what's waking the people up and I have to respond with this: Why is the moonlight doing that this night and not others? Is it a super moon? Is it a blood moon. Is there something different about that night than the others?

"Slowly but surely, they fell asleep once more, one by one; all except for a sweet little child who was admiring the view from afar" What view is Alexis admiring? This calls back to the previous issue. What makes tonight seem special?

"she made the sign of the cross in an effort to thank God for fulling (fulfilling?) her tiny request."

"But unfortunately for Alexis, she and like most children have always forgotten to lock their closets." Besides being a bit awkward in wording, I am left wondering if closets are normally locked in this town, if so, why?

Then there's the ending. "It pondered to itself, should it try out the new door approach or with its normal procedures?" This ending makes it feel like the introduction to a story rather than a complete story itself. For example it leaves questions like "what are its normal procedures?", "what is its goal here?", "why is it considering changing up its approach now?".

Here is a more in-depth guide to short stories. As it currently stands, I'm not really sure the horror you're trying to drive home here. With a title like deception, I assume there is a falsehood or act of subterfuge happening here, but I can't seem to find it in the story.

I'm sorry, but if this was uploaded in its current form, I'm fairly certain it would be deleted or at least marked for review as there are a number of plot issues here and the story feels incomplete.