Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33488654-20180828005908/@comment-33488654-20180829233028

BloodySpghetti wrote: This felt a lot like Im reading a very mechanical interview, much less a story. It lacks emotion, lacks the appearence of an actual conversation, it's just dry. Try watching interviews with serial killers and see how they talk and act, this could help you make it seem more like a dialogue between two (or more, on the investigating side) people. I tried to add some emotion to Amy. Sorry about the lack of it. I was going to use italics and exclamations before but a reviewer for another story I made said that a good story shouldn't need them.