Talk:Buyer Beware/@comment-26105992-20160907084118

The pacing... For what it's worth you had an interesting introduction. While not too creative, it was something intriguing. But it feels like there's a whole missing chunk in the middle that's missing. I don't usually say this but either the story needed to be longer in order to build up the antagonist better, or simply try and rework it a bit. Because right now, you got yourself something, which is more then I can say for most Pastas.