Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20190418144550/@comment-9041013-20190420140115

Okay so, the English is in a dire need of reworking.

Moreso, the story itself is just a bunch of very familiar fact like statements that show up in bad monster stories. "There was a weird kid." "Everyone hated him for being/looking weird" "The kid had an evil side" "The people around him hurt him for one reason or another, usually just to make a scapegoat out of him" "Kid goes insane and kills everyone."

If you want to go for the Wendigo angle, try to do something similar to the source, why not include a part where the family had to eat human food to get by which stuck with the kid and gave him cravings for something he could not fathom until he got angry enough. I mean, the family could look normal but the villagers around them knowing that they've cannibalized humans could add far more stigma than an ugly looking kid.

Wendigos are supposedly the result of winter harshness and famine making a person so spiritually weak they are possessed by a cannibalistic evil spirit that turns them into a monster. Apply that if anything.