Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20151013235142/@comment-26399604-20151122203144

Mmpratt99 deviantart,

Okay, I finally was able to read the October Series in its entirety with the exception of: The Basement of Doom, Doorway to Darkness, and the Gorgon Smile (I will read those later). I must say that I really enjoyed the stories and the world you created for them. It was a lengthy read, but I actually enjoy long stories; it allows for proper build up and more involvement with the characters.

I noted a comment by Doom for Short Hoggers in regards to creating a Lord Guide. It's actually something I think would be a pretty neat addition. The world you created can be easily followed based on the context of how the characters refer to these lands and creatures. With that said, I think it would be interesting to see an expansive guide that covers everything consisting in the world since it contains such a blend of so many elements. This not a bad thing in no way, just an agreement to a comment I saw.

As for your question on whether you wish to expand this particular sequel or start a new page, is entirely up to you. If you ask me, I think the story could benefit from another chapter or two before moving on. In the end, it's up to you based on how you want the transitions and content to be revealed.

In the end, I really enjoyed this series and will definitely add it to my list of favorites to read. Also did not want to forget to mention that I appreciated your artwork and how you used throughout the stories; it was a nice touch. I do look forward to hearing more from the series. Please let me know when you have next parts up.

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I did note a few discrepancies I wanted to address that need correcting. The corrections will be noted in "[]":

+How could she be sure that there wasn’t anyone waiting among the rows of kegs with a heavy truncheon and a large burlap sack [?]

+“But she wasn't cunnin' enough,” [Martina] chimed in, “fer she was caught when she blundered into a servant comin' through aft entrance.”

+“Those Highborn thought they had found a hidden loot, somethin' that miserly ole crone had walled up shortly afore she kicked th' bucket. But that secret cabin soon proved t' be a tomb that concealed somethin' far worse than any black spotted mummified pharaoh[.]”

+Kes wasn’t much of a cheese [enthusiast], but one [bite] from her garlic and herb-flavored slice drew an appreciative comment and a dismissal of her griping about time-consuming elfin etiquette.

+“Did [your] father believe that the Van Devereuxes were extremely patient and forgiving in their judgment of Anne?”