Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26475800-20151210060738/@comment-25947144-20151210195539

I have to say this was a great read. The idea, altough strangely familiar, is uniquely executed. There was a constant ascending in the pace that kept me enthralled. I didn't notice many grammar or punctuation errors, other than:

...it must have gone into bone because his finger wasn’t that think"- I think you meant to write thick'' here.

And I think Jeff knew he would confuse him if he asked for a question.- the narrator shouldn't be really speaking in the first person, but this is rather a small pick.

I only complaint goes towards Jeff. Shouldn't he know the rules better since he played so much before and be more careful? He only seems to get more naive as he turns more demonic. And for some reason the rules seem a little random and only go against Jeff. I think you kind of rushed at the end. I personally would've liked to see Dave fight until the morning rather than just abusing a loophole, but this is just my opinion.

I still have to give you kudos for the twist at end. It really had me.