Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26777739-20150724131103/@comment-26715482-20150725033647

Okay well I can start this off by saying that this story is too short and doesn't build up to anything in the end only that the writer and "Jaxson" might kill their families.

Secondly is that their is a lot of grammar mistakes in this and the misuse of words. Some examples of these are:"Ow! I just hit my hand against the wall heard" when heard should be hard, "   But seens I'm not 18 yet"    Seens should be sense, "   I shack my head"  shack should be shake etc.

In short you need to write this story to be longer, more flushed out, and explain why the bloody hell does Molly have these dark thoughts about harming her family. As this story stands I don't think this would pass QS at all.