Talk:Mother's Call/@comment-24796381-20140411183005/@comment-17758905-20150322184523

Congratulations. You added barbie to a pasta that didn't need it! Do you feel accomplished!? Would you like a cookie!?

Here's a better pasta: "Someone whose ego is greater than the sun tried to improve a classic creepypasta."

For one, "younge". I don't know what a younge girl is, but I'm pretty sure we shouldn't be assuming anything not stated in the story.

Number two, that "As she was running in the hallway, the cupboard door opens and a hand reaches out and pulls her in." is a terrible run-on sentence.