Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25148755-20140718050027/@comment-24381191-20140718141959

I honestly suck at titles so I caan't help you with that, sorry. But the story is really great, the grammar was perfect as far as I can see and there are no typos. It's an interesting concept, but it has been done before, you probably know that. The part where she said she wasn't Sarah made my stomach drop for some reason. I don't know why I found it that scary, cause honestly it wasn't.

But the story falls in the next scene. It's a scene that's done to death. The person is jolted back to reality, notices something that was probabaly not there before, questions if it was there, and ultimately dismisses it in the last few lines.