Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5239282-20140807152832/@comment-25216989-20140807154339

Necrosanity wrote:

Itiscoming wrote: Well, it's sorta like a poem, but the end was very nice. The first half has definetly been done before, but I like were you're going with this. Yeah, I combined certain elements found in religious depictions of paradise.

What do you mean by, it's "sorta" like a poem? Makes me worry. ;p

Yeah, poems sorta bug me unless they've got something new to bring. Just the formatting and stuff. The poem thing sort of goes back to the first half - it just read a lot like a poem for me. Then we got to the description of God, and it went from cute little poem to beginning of potientally awesome pasta very, very quickly.