Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24234841-20160709220029

This is a story I wrote for Whitix's Summer 2016 Creative Writing Contest. It's a little lengthy, totalling out to almost 9500 words. If anyone would be willing to take the time to read it and give me some honest feedback before I submit it, I'd really appreciate that. Look for typos, plotholes, or really just things you don't like about the story. Thanks. 