Talk:Grasp/@comment-25949140-20150302203709

This was pretty good. There are a few tropes throughout, but they're not bad ones and they're used in good ways.

The story could have been just as well done without the first paragraph, in my opinion. There is sufficient effort taken to establish the concept of impromptu comas/paralysis within the main story body. Perhaps if there had been a section where Julian did some research and tried to connect the dots back to the first story it might've been pertinent, but he does not. In fact, the monster itself reveals the mechanism by which it preys on people directly to Julian, further eliminating the need for the first paragraph.

Overall I liked it. Thanks for posting it.