Talk:The Tracer/@comment-5733573-20180415180116

I really liked this. I think it needs a bit more development and explanation in some places, though. For instance, just how did he acquire the materials necessary to pull off the story's climax. It also seemed a bit sudden, so some build up with be nice. Another thing I wanted was a better understanding of the relationship between Max and Jane, if in fact there was one. One a lesser but still important note, there are some grammar and typo errors that need to be cleaned up, especially in places where the verb tense is inconsistent. Still, even with these issues, this was a really great story with a compelling and engaging central character. Nice work!