User blog comment:Fireflowerman/Again..../@comment-24101790-20150308160319

Your story didn't meet quality standards again. I suggest sitting down and reading that page. (Especially #2)

Your story was a large paragraph.

You need to space out dialogue. There shouldn't be two speakers talking in the same line as it can get confusing as to who's saying what.

You forgot to put apostrophes on words indicating possession. Also it's=it is, its=possession. You are missing commas and periods from a few sentences that require them.

You don't capitalize the start of a few sentences and sometimes capitalize words in the middle for no reason.

Story issues: you approach the story like a checklist. Take a look at the story and count the number of times you used then. "The hound then ran...", "The hound then lunged...", "The hound then continues..." There is little description here and what little there is comes off as generic: "hound was dyed purple and had white glowing eyes, with red eye lids (eyelids), and blood all over the creature's lips. " Finally there is little story here other than the hound's rampage and the final lines are anti-climactic without more build-up. "The worst part Is (is) that this hound is still out there, today."

On one final note: you asked for the link to the writer's workshop in your last post. Why didn't you use it? They could have spotted a lot of these issues and given you an opportunity to fix them before posting it to the main site.