Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26393682-20150512211858/@comment-26326346-20150512220721

You have spaces between your words and question marks. There shouldn't be any spaces, your second line should look like this: Why? Why would he do that? We've suffered enough.

Instead of using these "«" you should use quotation marks.

You also shouldn't have any spaces between your words and an exclamation point. It should look like this: "We don't know, maybe she's alive, we don't know!"

The second paragraph first sentence: "the mirror you must have looked yourself in before going to this party" you are missing the word at in between looked and yourself.

You also have space between the semicolon and the word true, the space is unneeded.

I still think that you should remove the ellipses (...) as they ruin the pace and appear too often throughout the story to have any effect.

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You did really well for English not being your first language. I'd wait for a few more reviews before posting as I am not the best at spotting grammatical errors. You might try to make the ending more clear as I was a bit confused by it.

Good luck :)