Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29709755-20160821074606/@comment-29709755-20160828113005

Thanks for the extremely detailed and very critical review. I believe the second draft should have fixed most of it's original problems.

For anyone who may care: There is a bit more exposition, a few tweaks to the plot, a framing device and the monster has a much more prominent role. Plus all that purple prose was dragged out in the street and shot, bringing the total word count down to just about 2k.