Talk:Dom Perignon/@comment-36273417-20180721100801

This is excellently written! I always appreciate when a pasta incorporates vocabulary in a way that doesn't scream, "I know fancy words." I also like the way the thoughts of the narrator's sister evolve through the story, completing a simple piece of his background while narrative detail is developed in the story's foreground, the two eventually connecting at the climax. The memories of the sister also serve well as a pacing mechanism, intermittent in a way that segments the story wonderfully; a good strategy in general for keeping a reader's interest in any piece longer than a page or two. Beautifully done.