Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26006009-20150303090906/@comment-25477067-20150303171422

The grammar isn't the best, but the main problem is with the plot. To be frank, there is none. You need to explain further because this isn't creepy. If you had a longer pasta, I might be abele to help you a bit more, but with such a short story, I can't. I just can't

Also, again Silver Dark, what is with the "death note?"