Talk:The Girl with Golden Hair/@comment-26030957-20160603172903

This was a lovely pasta, wonderfully written. The prose elegantly captured the feel of 18th-century London.

It was also quite witty. Lines like, "Why, Bouguereau certainly ruined the very virtue of Aphrodite when he painted The Birth of Venus. Her locks are far too ruddy, almost as though she were a horrid ginger," had me laughing out loud. But not only were moments like this funny, they also ensconced the rather egotistic and sociopathic character traits of our narrator. The references to Sappho with the lesbian overtones were great (though I would have loved some pussy eating in there).

It reminded me a lot of the novel Perfume: The Story of a Murderer by 	Patrick Süskind which takes place in 18th-century France, only instead of the olfactory senses and perfumes, the evil protagonist's obsession is hair.

One thing that threw me off, though, was that the gender of the narrator was stated rather late and I assumed it to be a male at first.

Another thing is, it could have been creepier with a better opening hook. I think if darker and more disturbing themes had been more hinted at in the beginning it would make the piece more powerful. Also, (now, this may just be me because I am a sick fuck) I wanted more murders, more guts, more fun. I think this could be made longer. Killers rarely stop at one victim and it seems that this psycho is just getting started and has probably developed a taste for strangulation.

And maybe a bit more backstory on our narrator?

All in all, lovely prose that captures the time and transports the reader, a lot of witty fun with very clever repartee and murder, makes this an outstanding creepypasta.