Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4127849-20140318012020/@comment-4127849-20140319025306

Yeah, I agree with all of this. The main reason there was so much prelude was because I had intended this to be read as a normal story subverted with horror elements at the end, but it didn't really pull through. I was considering doing a major stylistic overhaul of the story, and maybe in the process cutting out some extraneous exposition and plot points, but that would require completely rewriting the story and it's just not that interesting a concept.

Thanks for all the input, though!