Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33696343-20181115144801/@comment-35711173-20181115200719

That wall of text paragraph starting with "The fourth road" is unreadable.

I got the strong feeling that you aren't familiar with California geography. I expected a story about driving through the Death Valley area of California. "East California" is confusing. While Death Valley is on the East side of California near the Nevada desert, it's only a small part of the Eastern California border.

I'd think you'd have some description of what's there, where you come from, etc. Who the heck is this guy? Due West of Death Valley is China Lake Naval Weapons Center. Much of it is four wheel drive country, not race car roads. Is this Badwater Basin? Is this Telescope Peak?