Talk:The Gym Teacher/@comment-25226524-20150429230114

Too many big words and too long. Make story shorter and use smaller words please. Nothing over five letters would be nice. Also, if you could add in more ghosts and maybe some more blood, that would be nice as well. Let me know if you fix these things, and I'll try to read it, but not until you fix these things. Thank you. Maybe something about a video game also. Feel free to credit me at the beginning of the story.