Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33077235-20180925204000/@comment-33077235-20180926001833

BloodySpghetti wrote: Simon Slaughters wrote: Simon Slaughters wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: I say, first get your first story well and done and then come up with the second one.

Doing half of one story and jumping onto another, it's just meh... Not a good idea, the same problems show up here too... It's too skinny and lacks in oomph, it's just not scary, nor emotion inducing, nor thought inducing... it's just there... I gave up on the last one. elabrate on wat was said. Honestly, the "evil" Grimm Reaper kind of character is rather boring, Death isn't evil, it's just there. It's a fact of nature, all things must come to an end. Unironically, even the universe will come to an end. Ironically however, living matter might be promoting enthropy through it's existence.

If anything the depiction of Death as a tragic character is far more powerful, because dying brings a lot pain, sadness, gloom, and over all negative notions into the atmosphere, for us humans, and well other intelligent animals too. Now if we're being realistic here, Death the "person" would be more of an ancient being that doesn't really care and has all the power in the world over pretty much everything. Think God just with more indifference and sarcasm. That, that would an ideal representation of a Death personified.

The story could be that the kid reachers the underworld and Death has to tell him his father put him out of his misery, but the story has to be told very tragically, and bluntly. Death tells it awfully bluntling and the child's memories are very childish with the final detailing of the child's murder at the hands of his parent to "save" the kid from his pediatric cancer... The idea is golden, your execution is very much not. The idea of it is he supposed to represent death but not accually be deat hence name Mr. Demise he tricks his victims into thinking they are some place different slowly building fear in them (like he does with the child) and consuming them by soul ar just the pysical being. Mr. Demise is not human.