User blog comment:Deadblogger/Well this is unfortunate/@comment-26030957-20151230183521

I found this blog to be rather lackluster with no real emotional appeal. While the writer was expressing himself in a straightforward manner with and admirable lack of verbosity, the narrative arc of the protagonist left me wanting. Where was the transformation, the change? I was hoping to see some spark of hope at the end, some type of affirmation that the narrator had discovered some positive aspect of the wiki in which he speaks. But it came off rather flat. Then there are the grammatical issues. No comma after well. “its come,” should be either “it has come” or “it’s come.” And since the term “instead” is used as a preposition in the opening sentence and not an adverb, that sentence is now incomplete. The two sentences should really be joined together. I also take umbrage to the use of the word “tenacity”. Tenacity literally means being able to grip something, synonyms would be “persistence” and “determination.” This is not at all how the word is used here. I believe the word “gall”, which means bold and impudent behavior, would be a much nicer fit. While I hate to pick nits, shouldn’t days follow hours? So, while some effort has clearly been made here in the fact that DeadBlogger’s fingers have clearly touched the keyboard, I’m going to have to express my disappointment in the finished product.