Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27014436-20150924112509/@comment-27012445-20150924205610

I'm sorry. I really didn't like this at all. The story was just a cherry picking of other over used horror formulas that were mashed together as tight as possible. Then end result was a flat story with characters I could care less if they lived forever or died tomorrow. Sorry, this didn't work for me at all. I like to offer suggestions but in this case its so hard because, like I said earlier, the foundation of your story is so overdone. If you want to rework this, try something challenging. Try a different time period, try a different culture. I would even try it from the perspective of a pet; like the family dog.