Talk:Heretics/@comment-25941663-20190106180726

I found a couple of instances where there was a grammatical error, but in both cases it's under a character's speech, so I'm not sure if it is a mistake. I didn't find these types of errors consistently (that is, apart from these the characters spoke quite eloquently), so I assume it is a typo.

"they can makes us"

"they will made to answer"

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I've got to be honest, I'm afraid I did not enjoy this. The problem is the subject of the story. The Irish turmoil just doesn't do it for me. First of all, I am not that familiar with what went down (I assume most readers are in the same boat) and that means it was a bit hard to follow, with all the Union names and stuff. Second, the subject is not scary on its own. I know that horrors follow war, but most of that is not actual "horror fiction" caliber on its own. This is no exception, unfortunately. It read more like a story set in a war time than a horror story. It would be really good if I knew more about that period and if it was not aimed at horror readers, but as it stands it is not an enjoyable read.

This would have been better if more emphasis was given to the characters. Given the like of horror, they are underdeveloped. If they were more fleshed out, what was going on would have had a greater effect on the reader. As it stands now, I'm afraid it leaves me apathetic to anything going on.

General Quality: Aside from the aforementioned typos (?), I noticed only a couple of mistakes. 24/25

Horror Factor: I am afraid, pretty much non-existent. 7/25

Deus Vult: Priesthood was involved, and the war itself had religious undertones, but here this did not feature much. 10/25

Entertainment Value: As a horror story, it is not entertaining. As a general story, it is much better, even though for me it didn't do it, since I am not that familiar with the subject. I'm sorry, but this was a miss for me. 11/25

Overall: 13/25