Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30881196-20161228230535/@comment-30881196-20170116190949

Alright. I was debating if I should cut the domestic shit out too. Ok, so the main issues as I understand it, are the signposting, the duller parts of the story, and labeling who is speaking/grammar? Mechanics are a huge weakness for me, but at least the prose was decent.

I think I can salvage it.