Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24466828-20151031185433/@comment-24466828-20151103023054

Thank you for taking your time to read this. I was getting a bit worried that no one would offer any advice on this.

I haven't thought of a new title yet. Once I get farther into this, I'll probably come up with one. I'll tell you a couple ideas I have later in this post.

I don't think I really have much room for character development. Considering how I plan part 2 to be, I'm not sure if I could fit much in. However, I should be able to put some in at the very beginning.

I don't think that I need to give my character a motivation for why he bashed his head in. He was bashing his head in with the rock because the guy nearly killed him by choking him to death. If some one nearly kills you, you'd probably beat the shit out of them too.

Surprisingly, I didn't intend for this to take inspiration from 80's slasher films. However, can you suggest slasher movies you think I should take inspiration from because that's a good idea now that you mentioned it. Also, how could I expand on the 80's slasher setup?

Can you give me a couple examples of fragmented sentences in this for me to fix?

In case you're interested, this is what I plan to do in part 2. After the protaganist wakes up, he is tied up to a wooden plank with 4 other people (remember the 4 cars he saw at the beginning before walking into the woods? Those people were also captured). They find out that they have been captured by a crazy religious cult and they plan to burn them. There are also a few other things which will go on but I won't spoil them.

Also, I'm planning to change this pasta's title to the name of the religious cult which captured them. Do you think that would be a better idea?