Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34296765-20160531232029/@comment-34296765-20160603033609

I corrected most of them, however:

I didn't exactly get what you meant by double-spaced. This seems to be in a normal format, and besides I showed this to Empy once and he didn't say anything much about it.

Otherwise, thank you for the critique. It helped my story a lot.