Talk:My Baby/@comment-24739611-20140328014312

Lots of delicious description, symbolism, a pinch of subtle foreshadowing mixed with innuendo, and a unreliable narrator that doesn't sound like a cookie-cutter burnout. Not to mention near-perfect grammar. Exquisite indeed.

My only complaints are that the occasional slang and coarse language clash with the atmosphere,  that it seems a little too hard to read all the way through due to the descriptions (irony, huh?), and that some of it seems to be worded a little confusingly. ( I pick up my boy, Trouble’s, shit.) But it's all nitpicking.

A wonderful, glorious 9.5/10. Nice work!