Talk:Blue Tears/@comment-35165020-20180418163825

Not good, just going to say it, look I am not a mean person, but this was pretty bad, and I will say why this creepypasta was bad

First: Cliches- you have had some cliches in this story, like the " I found a game in some random yard sale,and its free cliche  and the  rival wants to kill you cliche'', they are over used, try to be original.

Second: Haunted Game- ok, so this unknown character gets a game from a yard sale, sure then, he finds this game known to be Pokemon Blue, but it has this writen text on the Blastroise that says  TEARS , because reasons, anyways he buys the game for free and puts it in his SP so he could play, only to see a save file already there.(Now here comes every Pokemon cliche) The character selects the save file only to see that scary stuff is going to happen even though when you read the story, you can just feel that was going to happen.

Third: Connected with other Creepypastas- so this story refrences one creepypasta, but still, its kinda unoriginal, Raticate is Dead theory was the creepypasta that was used in the story, that was it, but it kinda ruins the story.

Fourth: Unesesery Ending- the ending to the story really ruind the creepypasta, saying how the man who made the yard sale killed his wife then killed himself, ok sure, but then you just say right after that  that one brother in the same family killed his other brother only for him to kill himself, then the main character now knows that he is the  next one to kill someone then himself , all that does is just make the story not scary at all, instead just a story with like a billion cliches. The ending was really bad and could have been better

Look, I am not here to hate on you, just here to say why this story was bad and how you can make better stories in the futere,3/10. Keep writing Auther