Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33937557-20180618195611/@comment-35958194-20180625122607

Im a noob so I cant really help you improve you story but I can say what I think about it. I like it. It was a little bit shocking and thats good. Also I like how the story isn`t very long. When I see a long story I just dont want to read it because it can be a waste of time. I have one problem and that problem is the start. I forced myself to continue reading it because the start didnt make me curious to know whats going to happen. Im glad I forced myself to continue reading.