Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20181104232254/@comment-33904527-20181106182609

BloodySpghetti wrote: Okay so, it's just not interesting.

Also, some key points important to address, introverts wouldn't make it as astronauts, that job requires living in a tiny space with people, can't do that if you can't handle people. Also teamwork is VERY important. Sleeplessness is bad for your health and your mental capability, the guy seems fine no matter how much you tear into him... Ughh...

Also the guy seems like he doesn't care about his world falling apart which is not good again.

You'd have to make me want to invest in this... because right now, I can't. I see your point about the part where Aaron describes himself as an introvert. I'm not sure what you mean by "the guy seems fine no matter how much you tear into him" considering that by the end of the story, he's eating glass and has been completely broken down mentally.

I think I might've had a good concept here. I'm going to try and rewrite it. See my reply to NedWolfkin if you have any other queries.