Talk:Shady/@comment-29507836-20161010120102

I like the originality, and the writing is nice. Improvable, but nice.

However, I felt that the lack of character development was obvious; it was as if he was a robot, you weren't expressing his feelings enough for me to feel that he was actually real. I also think that the scare factor could be higher, since the criminal (or group of criminals) was just killing and robbing people and selling their items online. I also think that the story was too short in this case, since you could have easily stretched it out more. Instead, you skip some of the story, as if you were rushing it. In fact, if you detailed the story more, my rating would be a little bit higher.

However, for now, I think I'll rate it a 4/10.