Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27080023-20151015114153/@comment-27008899-20151016115502

Great wording. Some minor puntuation errors but they do not take away from the story. There are few cliche lines like "then we heard it". The story is engaging but the plot is not original. Your telling of it is, but nothing really jumps out to set it apart from similar plots. Over all it is a good story which you should be proud of. I would make a few tweaks, maybe some back story to the house, and perhaps some a little more creep.