Talk:Innocent Souls/@comment-25170312-20151101022412

Interesting social commentary, but the dialogue is kind of inconsistent. The author really needed to choose which way they wanted Feel to speak. Mostly it felt like they were an ancient being, but then suddenly they were modern and then back again. When they started talking about being bullied at school it really took me out of the experience. I was like, "Oh, now it's a bullied kid pasta?" Obviously, it's not, but that's my point.

A good idea, but could have been better.