Talk:The Feind House/@comment-25143862-20180214172833

Okay, so this story sets the stage for things to come in Lenoresfield, which turns out to be interesting (The Boy Who Cried Sheep was my first read).

- At the beginning of the story, you write that Mr Feind was considered a Satanist. And then you repeat that consideration again:

''...though a few of the older members of Lenoresfield muttered under their breath that Feind was a Satanist, and had cursed the house in a final act of defiance towards the bank... and in the same paragraph: while another claimed that Feind was a devoted Satanist, and in a final act of defiance, had cursed the house to prevent the bank from selling it once they foreclosed on it''

- I notice some issues with verbal tenses; in your description of the events the camera recorded, the narrator makes use of both the present and past tense. This is somewhat confusing. Also regarding the narration of the recordings, sometimes you describe Marisa's feelings as recorded facts rather than interpretations of the viewer.

Regardless, I'll enjoy reading up on Lenoresfield.