Talk:The Abalone Thief/@comment-25024572-20150201010918

This story isn't very good, to be frank. The introduction made it seem like he had some huge revolutionary experience, but that's not what I got from the story. Also, what was with the cult? It seemed to just be there because...I have no idea why. Maybe I didn't get it or something, I don't know, but I feel that this story needs a bit more, and doesn't make much sense. Another thing, there are a few spelling errors here or there. I'd correct that if I were you. That all being said, the main character was actually written pretty well, and it seems like you know a thing or two about sea life, so kudos. (By the way, does Humbolt county have anything to do with your name?) Also, the little girl was pretty adorable. While this story isn't terrible, I'd recommend a bit of improvement on it.