Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28391333-20160507012607

Hello person reading this! So basically I've wanted to make a Gaming pasta (Don't go yet!) and I need help. The last story I did was... not good. And I need outside opinions just so that I can make this new one good. (Because everyone likes good stories) Please give your 100% honest opinion with this story, thanks!

START OF DA STORRY:

I just… I don’t know what to do. I mean, the title is there. My warning has be sent. But, I know i’m going to have to do some… convincing. So, here I go. This is my story. And I suggest you don’t take it lightly.

So, here I was. Sitting in my pajamas, scrolling through steam. I had seen a game that had peaked my interest. It was called Braid. At first I thought it was a Mario knockoff. It was about this guy named Tim who had to save his girlfriend, who was a princess. Seems reasonable to assume, right? Well, in this game Tim-Mario could time travel. That was cool. I wanted to know what that was like, but I was still unsure if it was worth the twenty dollars. So, I decided to use a… not so legal route. I went to the Dark Web and wanted to see if I could pirate it in any way. I found a website that was giving out game files for free. And lucky me, I found Braid.

So I extracted it. But when I tried to play the game, a error message popped up. It read:

This program can’t start because FreeGameKey.dll is missing from your computer. Try reinstalling the program to fix this problem.

Now… I don’t know if thing would have gone differently if I had just used another website. Everything was running smoothly until I downloaded that damn .dll file. I would just warn people not to use that particular website, but I don’t know how many sister sites it has. Besides, I can’t for the life of me remember it’s name. I know, I suck. But I seriously think that it’s not my own memory’s fault.

I started the game. Everything was… okay. There were a couple of weird glitches, like Tim would sometimes travel back in time without me pressing anything. Or a book would show text that looks like poorly rendered splattered ink. Nothing game breaking. At the time I thought; “Oh yah, I got this from a shady website. Totally normal.” Then, I got to World 7.

World 7 started out normally. The game actually seemed to be less glitchy. I completed the first level and read the second book. Now, I can’t remember exactly, but I think it read:

Tim, why are you doing this? Why are you here? This is not your world.

Now, at the time, I thought that part of the game’s story. But now that I look back on it, I'm not too sure. Anyways, I went to the next level. It was weird. It was the level before. No joke, it was EXACTLY the same. The only thing different was the title. That was when I started to get a bit weirded out.

Each and every level was the same. Same traps, same monsters, same puzzles, same, same, same, same, same, same, same, same, same. I was slowly going insane. My only saving grace were the books. Each one was different. And each one scared me more and more.

Book 3:

Are you getting bored? Perhaps a bit tired? Why don't you just stop the game.

Being the rebellious twenty something year old I am, I continued playing. I am so glad I didn't listen to that piece of precious advice.

Book 4:

This is real, you realize that right?

Book 5:

Do you hear breathing? Take off your headphones and maybe you will.

This… THIS… THIS one sentence did something to me. I was wearing headphones at the time, and there is no possible way that it could've known that. I'm STILL wearing my headphones. I. Am. Not. Taking. Them. Off.

Book 6:

Meat is good, won't you agree?

At this book… I just can't do this anymore. At this book I felt something breathing down my neck. I don't know why it's tormenting me like this. I don't know why it didn't already eat me. But it's still behind me.

Once I read that I grabbed my phone and started writing this warning.

I just can't do this! I can't exit out of the game, I live alone, and my phone has no service. I can't turn around. It'll probably eat me. I can't stop playing the game for a long period of time. It'll probably eat me. I can't do ANYTHING other than play that stupid, stupid, stupid, stupid, stupid, level over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, again.

I don't want to die. 