Talk:The Itsy Bitsy Spider/@comment-33623764-20171111211142

This story was beyond bad. I understand you guys are beginning writers, and for that, this is alright, but at the same time, this is terribly written. First off, you began with a cliche "abusive parent" and "never has time" family structure. Which, while it is not too bad if you execute it properly, it is still way over used. Then, of course the main character just ran into the woods, as all normal people do. First off, who in their right mind would run into the woods after being abused? No one, because they are not retarded. They would most likely run into the city or to the police. But noooo, she just HAD to run into the woods. And of course a bunch of drunk teens are in there, cause why not. The almost rape part was well done at least, until nemisis came over with her fucking yo-yo. A yo-yo is NOT a good weapon, and she would not be able to kill all of them like that, but whatever. Then the friendship thing was alright and the rest of the story was also pretty bad, but I am not going to go into it. Over all a 1.5\10