Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180827215503/@comment-36393004-20180829124524

DrBobSmith wrote: I don't feel the connection with the last installment. OK, same guy, a couple of years later, now dead. I just don't feel the chase making sense.

You also have a lot of grammar errors, too many at this stage to correct. Ok, I ran it through a grammar checker and fixed what it identified. Any suggestions on content? I am trying to build a need for the son to find out more about his father but maybe I am missing some element that will help tie back into the first installment.