Talk:A Figure in the Fog/@comment-34032049-20180115191916

Good Story. Although it is one that has been done before many times, this was one of the better interpretations. (Entity terrorizes town. Unlikely heros decide to take it head on)

Well written and author creatively dodges some regular Cliche's. specifically in the ending of each characters saga.

Negatives to point out would be the overly Adult Characteristics of the young characters. From Morgan's cynical "mater of fact" attitude towards the loss of her sister to Jamie and Lester's selfless sacrifices while smiling and accepting their immidiate demise. (which proved to be a fruitless attempt on both sides)

Romance is somehing i stil have yet to see done right in a creepy pasta and this author seemed to be on his/her way to doing a perfect job. but then it abruptly ended. (Tragically)

Finally, the entire abusive relationship with the father seemed like a waste of content. It set the dark tone for the entire story very well, but thats all it did.

I enjoy all of these tragic themes, and the author created them beautifally but then seemed to abandon them. They needed more substance to really impact the story.

I dont like to talk too much about what i liked in a story because that should be left for the reader to enjoy. I tend to stick with constructive criticism but i HAVE to mention the endings. I loved how the author used the toughest part of creating a story to add his own personal authenticity to a common story. the closing sentence tying into the opening was just awsome. Kudos.

overall 7.7/10. one of the better pastas for sure