Talk:Containment Project 2 II - Alexis/@comment-35711173-20181129171437

Thedarkflintstone,

You released this story without taking the time to proofread it. This is way below Wiki standards at this point in time.

Please read my BLOG entry below.

User_blog:DrBobSmith/Basic_Spell_and_Grammar_Checking

After using tools to get the worst errors out, read it out loud to yourself several times.

You also have a plot point issue. You can fix it fairly simply, but you need to do it. There were no laptop computers in 1980. I know, I was there. The first portable computer with a battery pack was the Osborne 1. It was the size and shape of a sewing machine. I would say weight, if you are used to 1950's sewing machines with all metal internals. The first computers resembling a laptop came out in 1983.



The first computer that we would recognize as a laptop was from 1985.



It wasn't until the early 1990's that laptops that were of a reasonable weight and had a display you could read came out.