Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28266772-20160624221243/@comment-28420405-20160629194819

Ahh yes, childhood nicknames. I had a few friends with some strange ones, too!

Honestly, I don't think the quote would add much. Perhaps if it regarded legs, or something more arachnid, then I'd add it. I can see where it would fit and add a creepy factor, especially since the verse is from the Bible, but honestly I don't think you'd want to add to the word count of this story with an unnecessary quote. Yes, it works, but no I don't think it should be added. Did that make sense? lol

That being said, I have no qualms with changing the title, but perhaps don't change it to that if you don't add the quote. If you REALLY want to title your story that way, I would add the quote, but trim some fat in the story (although I don't see a lot of places you could condense, I find this story quite compelling as is).

Hope this helps! I'm happy to read it again. I am happy to read start to finish for you once more (maybe even twice if you're nice!)