Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26399604-20150920044954/@comment-26399604-20150923013300

Oaura,

First off, thank you for taking the time to read the story. Like I mentioned at the top it is indeed avery long. I actually devised the "chapters" after posting it to break it up and provide the reader with moments to take a breather. I'm not sure if that's how you read it, but that was the original intention.

In regards to the 'Did Right' section, I'm glad those elements stood out. The points you mentioned were some of the things I wanted to highlight and I'm glad those pieces were recognized.

In regards to the 'Did Wrong' section, I appreciate the honest feedback. I will be honest and admit the last few portions were a bit rushed. I wrote the story in the span of a week and the final day I was very tired and half asleep. I wanted to post the story prior to sleeping and before my deadline of the week. After reading those comments, I read over some parts and I definitely noticed most of those grammatical errors back to back at the end. I was actually surprised and little embarrassed realizing I didn't notice them before, even after reading the whole thing out loud (again half asleep when this happened).

With the fear element and the climatic areas, I understand your points and they are indeed valid. I will definitely revisit those regions to develop and place a stronger more believable emphasis where necessary.

Overall, I'm glad the story left a decent taste in your mouth. I will return to the areas and others as mentioned and make the proper corrections. Thank you again for reading my story and most importantly, for providing a thorough review.