Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25083225-20160414225804/@comment-28229401-20160417233618

Hey there,  I know it’s a WIP, but I noticed a parentheses error during dialog. But that is something that can be corrected a bit later on once you’ve gotten somethings down about what you want to happen.

I love the idea you have, it needs to be finely tuned but it is still a good idea. I can only give you feedback on what you have given thus far. I think what would be really awesome for this piece is that maybe you paint more of a picture of the ambience surrounding these two people and painting. Maybe try being a little be more descriptive. Paint a visual picture so that it feels immersive to the story.

