Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29826537-20160901145558/@comment-29826537-20160901225327

Alright, thanks for the feedback, I'll start working on a redraft when I have time. Hopefully I'll find a way around the plot holes.

The annoying thing is no longer than an hour after I posted this story here I read up on dialogue formating, if I had just read it sooner there would be far fewer mistakes. Ah well, it's my own fault for assuming I knew it all.

Thanks again, it's a huge help.