Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20150221185932/@comment-25226524-20150221220201



Well I really liked this. I really don't see anything too jarring or confusing, and it's definitely original enough to not worry about its similarity to another story. I thought the revelation was very unsettling and I actually cringed a bit. I've already told you the couple things I noticed and I really don't see anything else wrong that's worth mentioning. I enjoyed it and definitely think it has enough creep factor to balance out the feely factor. It may be a little long, but as far as I could tell it all seemed relevant and added to the story. I'll try to read over it again later and make sure I feel the same after a second reading.