Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31477126-20170823183346/@comment-30307610-20170828195558

It seems really weird that you are directing all my comments at me. First off, I have posted my story to the writers workshop prior to this so that it can be improved. Second, there is no "Albatross" story on this site that I can find, and if you have found it you could provide the link because "The Albatross" is a very old riddle, not a creepypasta. Third, in every of my comments to you I admitted that I could improve my story and make it work better. Having talked to you about it I know where I could improve upon. My only comment on that was that the idea of it happening isn't shoehorned or forced, it's just not set up enough.

Having said all that:

" Most will infer that Spot is their pet, but not giving extra information doesn't help the audience build up the image in their mind."

I can get behind that, but also the opposite is true. Saying something generic will let the reader make up more images in their mind. If the narrator says "my dog spot" they are limiting the reader by not letting them have their imagination, whereas having the one you say, the pet could be a dog, a cat, a snake and unless it is needed for the story, its not a detail that will effect the story. Leaving out details isn't always a bad thing and my point was that it seems like your oppinion is that it always is.

"There were a lot more sleep paralysis stories that the admins have narrowed down (which experienced a boom a few months back after a couple of Youtubers posted "True Sleep Paralysis Stories")"

This is probably something you should have led with. Saying there are a dozen or so out there isn't really implying that there are a lot and I appologize but I am simply not familiar with the trajectories as you are. Saying that we had to cut a lot of them down to a dozen makes much more sense as to what you are trying to limit. As you keep pointing out more details are better.

Again, I am not trying to discredit your review so that I dont have to rework my story. I have other stories that I can post and I am working to make the one you reviewed better already. I agreed with your story and I just want to make sure that your reviews aren't being biased by adding another line of thought to it. I do not mean any ill will, only wish to open debate to see that there are two sides to a coin. A very effective pasta does not need lots of detail or lots of description as is true of micro pasta, sometimes letting the reader imagine something is more important than telling them what is going on. As I say when I do reviews, its better to show than to tell, so I understand where you are comming from.