Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20180822012506/@comment-35711173-20180822060820

KillaHawke1 wrote: As always, thank you for your feedback. I think you are right, but could you elaborate on, when you say "carefully look up" Im not sure what you are saying

Sir,

What I mean is that you should VERY carefully evaluate whether anything above that point has anything to do with the story. I know if you edit ruthlessly above that point that what remains will be short. Unfortunately, they drag what remains down. We don't need the history of killer bees any more than the story of a man with a revolver who shoots people needs to know of the history of the revolver from the 1580 matchlock rifle to Colonel Colt to the Rollin White patent on cartridge guns that Smith and Wesson squandered to ...