Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28856385-20171228223029/@comment-35251736-20171229185556

I'm with Icydice here. I think it has an intriguing premise, but needs a pace change and bit of character development. Could it be possible to add a conversation between the narrator and F to kind of showcase their relationship? Generally a good (even slightly boring) conversation will give the audience a bit more insight to the characters.