Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35817505-20180611125531/@comment-35711173-20180611153927

I second that. You really need to spend work cleaning this up.

This is the first sentence. You have two spelling errors and it is an extreme run on sentence.

"It has been a month sense my friend, Breanna, had dissapeared, most of the town was slightly shocked, including her mother, Theresa, whp said she almost had a heart attack when she arrived home from work to find her daughter not anywhere in the house."

From the voice, it sounds like you are in school still. If school is still in session where you are, take this to your English teacher and make a project out of learning what went wrong.