Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27281416-20151126234634/@comment-24101790-20151127004830

I'm sorry, but this story feels incredibly rushed and really has little content. I originally deleted it for being well-below our quality standards due to numerous punctuation, spelling, capitalization, wording, and story issues.

Spelling issues: "cause (sic) it feels like he is behind me, breathing.", Capitalization issues: "I" needs to be capitalized "i have", "And i need", etc. Punctuation issues: "heavy feet’s" plurals do not need apostrophes. Commas missing from numerous sentences where pauses are implied.

Wording issues: "It smell horribly, it smells burned corpses in the whole house", "How should I known it was a bad idea.(should be a question mark)", "I read on the internet that nothing would happened and it was all fake.", "He is screaming in a foreign language and he only scream louder now.", "i have locked it but it’s sounds like he is breaking through it.", etc. If English isn't your first language, please get someone who is fluent who can help you.

Story issues: there is very little content here and the "I don't have much time to write this" aspect feels really forced. Lines like this: "His screams is (are) piercing me! God please help me! The door flies open and he is coming closer. Everything is mute, I can’t even hear him anymore. ." don't really work. Imagine the protagonist typing all of this while the monster is rampaging downstairs. Imaging them continuing to type while the monster breaks into their room. It just feels off that they would spend so much time on it, rather than say, trying to escape. I'm sorry, but there are way too many issues here.