Talk:Corpus/@comment-4715955-20170828220054

Colosotomy? So the subjects were given poo bags? Presumably you meant Corpus Callosotomy, which you spelled correctly in the beginning, and failed to do so for the rest of the story. Also, Tylenol is not ibuprofen, it's acetaminophen. Scientists wouldn't refer to it by a brand name anyway: they'd use the chemical name.

"Apparently Subject One had been using the chemicals provided for normal life activities as supplemental medicines." What chemicals? You mean Comet? Toothpaste? Why so vague?

"Un-seeable entity" should be "unseen" or "invisible".

"Some have stated that they are creeped out as they do not understand how he can see through the two way glass." They're idiots. Anyone can see through two-way glass. One-way glass is probably what you meant. "Others have dismissed this as a coincidence." How? What's a coincidence? That he can see through it? Too vague.

"She has taken to eating parts of her cheek and lips. This would be normal behavior for anyone if not for the constant nature of it." lol On what planet is this considered normal?

If you're gonna write sci-fi, you HAVE to get the irl science shit right, and your portrayal of scientific procedure HAS to be accurate. I learned this the hard way myself.

The whole premise is ludicrous anyway: that reversing a callosotomy procedure would somehow cause so many random supernatural occurrences for no logical reason. The monologue at the end is cheesy, neither scary nor profound, and fails to adequately explain why all of this random weirdness occurs just from reconnecting two halves of the same brain. There's no rhyme or reason behind the science or the horror, so I'm sorry to say it fails as a horror story and as a science fiction story.