Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36299239-20190304064951/@comment-36627132-20190305114536

PernicketyPony wrote: Thank for taking the time to read and comment.

The use of horror story tropes was deliberate, but I'm disappointed to hear it crossed over into being cliche. Back to the drawing-board, I guess.

I might take BloodySpghetti's advice and do a spinpasta appeal, if just for the sake of hopefully getting some feedback on if and how this piece can be improved.

Cheers. Actually, I don't think you would need to do a spinoff appeal since it is about the toys and not the show. According to the blacklisted subjects list " No MLP grimdark fics. Nothing personal, it's just that they start to all blend together after a while and we need a new approach to pony pastas. Try writing a pasta about (gasp) the figurines themselves instead."

That aside, I suggest against using trope after trope in your next story. Since most tropes are cliches, the more you add the more you're risking your story being just one big cliche storm.