Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25365080-20150629035908/@comment-26543200-20150629060014

This is great! I really love how quickly it takes a dark turn! Only things I would fix are simple grammatical and spelling errors:

Aya was the most adorable cat I have ever known

she would cuddle up in my arms

She was running across the road towards me

When daddy asked me what happened, (no comma is needed here)

But daddy only smiled and told me it was okay.

many heroes in movies and stories who were seemingly

I ran into the garden first thing next morning, only to find

all kittens must leave their homes after they grow up, shouldn't they?" he planted a kiss on my forehead

I was crying only because (take out the word 'that') I didn't have the opportunity

missed a step while descending the stairs, and rolled loudly down them.

Dried blood had drawn a red line down his chin, and his eyes were like ping-pong balls