Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26441061-20150529162516/@comment-26007602-20150601054413

First things first, make sure you're in source mode when you edit, so the font is set on default.

You should read this, as it explains the pitfalls of your story. It's a clichéd OC story that this site sees time and time again. The bullies are there for the sake of being evil, the character is an overpowered teenager; there's nothing new here. I don't want to go into too much detail, as that link should clear things up by itself.

On where to go next, I advise you scrap the story. You've created a plot around the character, when you should be developing the character within the plot. The idea of a narcissistic serial killer (Richard isn't much of a serial killer; he just kills people who are "mean" to him) could be developed, but you'd need to heavily rework the story. If you're set on that route, I'd advise you do it from the victims perspective instead.