Talk:Hurt/@comment-24101790-20150629012920

Sorry for the delay, I was waiting for everyone who was participating to post their stories before I started commenting and reviewing them, so as not to discourage anyone or pick favorites before everyone had turned in their entries. Despite the rocky start you had with the punctuation, spacing, wording, and formatting issues, the story turned out nicely.

You did a good job building the post-apocalyptic world that Ban and Ezra inhabit, although I would have liked a little more back-story as to how those two are in opposition to ‘God’s law’ that the assassin references. It feels like this was part of a larger story that wasn’t included.

Additionally, while you did reference the source material a few times through John and Ezra’s name, I never really felt like you were using the song effectively like the other authors who entered this contest had while focusing more on referencing Johnny Cash’s cover of the Trent Reznor song through the title.