Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26525489-20150623192655/@comment-26525489-20150623213759

The multiple entries will be added later into the same thread. At least, that's my intention. I liked the way it worked for stories like Pen Pal and 1999. The steadily developing story is something I really enjoy, but it is very much challenge to pull off so I will have to be very attentive to make sure it works.

That is an interesting idea to tie a few items into the character upstairs. It'll be tricky, because, obviously, the kids can't know anything has been living there since the murders, so it'll have to be subtle. I like the idea of that, though. I'll brainstorm some ideas for that. I'm also thinking I might add a few more tie ins to the murders that happened there, because that is the reason the house is significant to the kids. Something to add a little more depth to their motivations and moods while in the house.

I did speed over the leaving the house scene, so extending that would be a beneficial to the creepiness at least. The note is something I could add a little bit to as well. Especially since the tone is friendly, and invitation to return could be really creepy.

And you're absolutely right about the ending, forshadowing would be extremely beneficial. I have a basic structure of the whole story in my head, but I need to figure out the plot of some of the individual entries and get a timeline set up. I'm not sure that I'll tell every story in chronological order yet, but once I figure out which will be the next to come I'll definitely forshadow to that a bit. I have to remember that this story is different than a lot of other developing stories because the protagonist knows at least most, if not all, of the whole story. Therefore, he knows the implications of what actions were taken and forshadowing would not be out of place.

I appreciate the time you're taking with this, you're giving me a lot of good feedback!