Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20141118060220/@comment-25623211-20141121184120

Mmpratt99 deviantart wrote: Yes, I reread those two paragraphs and I agree with you, they seem more of a distraction from the main story theme. Does this shorten version sound any better?

Even though Ramona was a hoarder and borderline cat lady, she certainly wasn’t crazy to the point of bizarre public behavior. In this Northwestern corner of North Dakota, where catfish fishing and baseball reigned supreme, there were plenty of other candidates that fit crazy train category.

I think that would fit in well with the story.