Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190309004843/@comment-33904527-20190309215822

Do you check the road even if you know there's no cars coming? Do you save on a game even if you know you just saved 2 seconds ago? Why is the protagonist being cautious seen as an issue here? It seems all you are able to do is criticise very small plot points that do not affect the story in any way.

"Mental breakdowns don't lead to death" Really? Maybe not directly, but you can't convince me that Annie's mental state had no correlation to her death.

Also, you've gone from "Annie had no reason to die" to "Annie didn't die in the right way". So what? Like I said, it's not a relevant issue to the story. Annie dies of the reasons listed above, end of story. Literally at the end of the story. It's not unheard of that it is possible to just drop dead. It doesn't spoil anything if Annie dies in a way different to what you wanted.