Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24743835-20140329223839/@comment-4519961-20140329224054

The writing is just a little awkward, mainly the first two paragraphs as the flow jumps back and forth in a way that you have to go back to make sure you read it right, and I feel like you could use more descriptive words like replacing "young age" with "tender age"

other than that its a great start, cant wait to see where it goes