Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26286557-20160427094802/@comment-25569708-20160427190221

In addition to what already has been said here about your story, I would just like to point out that when the food critic sees the sender's address on the box, it would probably be a good idea for him to recognize that the package was sent only a short distance away from his house, since it apparently is in walking distance for the critic. I think if he were to note that, it would make the package seem even more mysterious in the beginning.

I think if you iron out all the issues, however, you will have a very cool pasta on your hands.