Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26021864-20151127043331/@comment-10789912-20151127051745

JaviNLN wrote: I changed it, I hope you can tell me if there's any mistakes left. And if it feels more like a premise and ergo cannot be uploaded as a pasta here I'm fine with it and of course I won't do it. But if you could tell me if it's a "good" or "bad" premise it would be great, I can work with that.

PS: I'm latin so I'm working on my english writing If you really, really need help with your English corrections, just because this is such a short story, I'm absolutely positive one of us will be willing to proofread your story for you. I'll do it myself, if need be.