Talk:Trick or Treating/@comment-36627132-20191027205145

If I may be honest, the plot feels like something that has been done before. Not just in Creepypasta, but in general. The main character is bullied and meets someone warm and friendly who turns out to be a monster. Heck, that's stuff that happens very often in real life.

I will admit that when I first saw the bully characters I was afraid this was going to turn into a Jeff inspired story.

The characters are slightly cartoonishly written. The mother is uncaring and forces her child to go trick or treating, the main character is awkward, the bullies are buffoons with potty mouths, and the monster character is your typical guardian who turns out to be a monster.

The story itself is anti-climactic and lacking in build up. First time readers who don't yet know what is going to happen won't find anything holding them on to the story. The closest thing we get is when the bullies arrive on scene, which may or may not make first time readers believe that they will deliver the build up and/or the climax.

As Dr. Bob pointed out, the story is hinted to end with the "I'm dead, but telling this story" cliche. It almost feels as if the author gave up half way through.