Talk:Broken Mirrors/@comment-26193563-20150629190647/@comment-26112985-20150630014028

Yes! After much wasted time spent on summer vacations, I have indeed returned! Its good to see you again Rising.

It tooks me the better part of a month to write this story, I had the main character having sex with dead bodies because I felt the need to articulate how unstable Leon had become. I wanted him to feel like he not only wanted to love, but wanted love in return. The only way to do this was to have the girl dead. That way, there would be no protesting. Admittedly this is something I could've done better, and one of the things I will improve on in the revised version of this pasta, which will probably be up in about a couple of weeks.

In terms of the angel, I feel as if I should explain myself better. The truth is that there is no angel. Its just a voice in Leon's head that tells him to do all these things. I wanted to metaphorically show in this story how religion makes people do things that are insane, even if it is all just a lie. As for loving someone who is dead, Leon was pretty unstable in the first place, and it was knowing that nobody could ever love him that ultimately pushed him over the edge. In his deformed state of mind, Leon was prepared to love anyone alive or dead.

Leon's childhood and teenage years were a lot of fun to write, more so even than the parts when he later stalked leslie. I am currently debating with myself on whether or not I should remove the part about Leon being bullied. The reason that I included it in the first place was that I was planning to have Leon get his revenge, but in the end I decided that I didn't want any glaring similarities to "Jeff the Killer".

I knew this story was going to be more about the main character than anything else when I began to write it. When Grim did a review of one of my other stories, Radio static, one of his biggest complaints was that I didn't delve into my main character quite enough. Inspired by these thoughts, I decided to see just how good of a character I could create.

My switching of the past and present tenses is probably one of the more noticeable flaws in the pasta, I've added it to the list of things I need to improve on.

I appreciate that you took the time and effort to read and review this pasta, especially since it is pretty long. Do you want me to tell you when I am done with the revised version? It'll probably be different than this one in more way than one. From now on, if my pasta is long, than I'll submit it to the writer's workshop. Lesson learned xp

Thanks again!