Talk:The Cropping of Life/@comment-26007602-20151210062724

Always love the idea of humanity being used as entertainment.

The first few paragraphs of the story irked me a bit, as Richard seems far too accepting of his fate. I don't know, but if I woke up naked in a cornfield, I don't think I'd so easily start fumbling around without checking whether I were dreaming or something. Something a bit more than, "Where am I? Oh well, mind as well start treading forward." Maybe that's a nitpick, but I think he could have a more thorough reaction.

Again, love the idea of aliens using humanity for sport, and since you made it a point that their culture was distinctly different than ours, I won't complain about the idea of this show. Sure, to humans, it might get boring watching others get devoured in the same way day after day, but maybe the aliens crave it, like a daily ritual or something. It works.

Personally, I would have like more description as Richard ran through the cornfields, but that may break up the flow. I think a bit more of a transition would work as the alien chases him. It mentions bloodied cornstalks (which I really like for some reason), human remains, and bugs all at once; spacing them out might prolong the chase, but it could also show the desperation and hopelessness as Richard progressed towards his doom. Hope I got that idea across.

Finally, there was some awkward wording, but that didn't bother me too much as the rest of the story is well written. A pretty good read, all in all. Hope this insight is useful!