Talk:He's Here.../@comment-24281984-20141125211100

I like shorter stories, but this one was a bit too much. There wasn't really enough time to get immersed in the story, and although the ending felt kind of abrupt it was somewhat creepy. The writing itself was also a bit liking- the way the person was talking didn't seem to feel like how a person seeking therapy would speak. It really should be rewritten or given a thorough edit. There were a few grammar errors that I fixed as well.