Talk:Drums in the Sky/@comment-26193563-20150506221140/@comment-22853789-20150506235821

No worries.

I must admit I have some trouble with dialogue especially when I try to make it casual as I did here.

I'm glad you brought up the plot hole, I completely missed that. I forgot to give the bullies a reason as to why they did what they did to Ariana.

The loophole now that I think about, as you said, is too specific, too convenient to the circumstances.

Another thing I have had trouble with is ending a story and/or wrapping it up.

As for the grammar errors, run-on sentences, or fragments. Sure, I would appreciate any help to fix them.

I really enjoyed this challenge and I look foreword to any in future.