Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28060931-20160506143219/@comment-28060931-20160523210940

Okay, the third draft is ready. I took a huge risk altering the plot line the way I did, I know that. But considering the fact that this story needed more orignality, I think I had to. It might be for the better, it might be for the worst. I don't know.

I removed some of the more "high-tier" words, and added a little more complex sentences. I hope it helped. Also, I wonder should I vary the sentences lenght like I just did, or keep it around the same level, or vary it even more. I think it is easier to read varied sentence lenght. And the lenght is varied in most novels I read, so I tried to write a few long sentences, followed by a few short, or mederate sentences.

Lastly, I wonder should I use colons, and semi-colons as much as I did. I personally think they are an underapprieciated puncuation mark, but I heard they make stories seem too academic, and break the immersion.

I know these questions are stupid. But I am trying to devolpe my writing style, and prose, but ANY feedback is appreicated.