Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28420405-20160816123509/@comment-4849011-20160817004135

I was going to say that part of me liked the first ending, but this new ending has really grown on me to the point that I think I prefer it even though there's gore. Of course, you didn't go overboard, telling enough to convey the full horror of the situation. In any case, this was a chiller. I liked the richness of the description. You conveyed horror without going over the top, and you made the characters relatable and sympathetic. Most of the teens there may have misbehaved, but they weren't bad people until they were pushed over the edge. Good job, and good luck with whatever you're dealing with.