Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27304089-20151128001110/@comment-27304089-20151130173225

Thanks for the review

I was felt that it kind of dragged myself but I was did not want to upload one of those bad stories that is two paragrahs and "ZOMG twist ending" but I admit I could cut things

I am glad that the biggest problems are more "editor" style issuies that actual content as that is by far my biggest weakness

I think it just needs a bit more focus like you said