Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20150610190224/@comment-25170312-20150611145320

First of all, I can see that english is not your first language because the incorrect grammar makes it almost unreadable. You would probably need someone to translate it more accurately. I'm assuming you used google translate or something like that.

As for the story itself, it is a total cliche and has been done a million times. And there's no reason to say people are white or afro-american if it has nothing to do with the story. Try to write something more original and then have it properly translated.