Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190725084302/@comment-35711173-20190804080503

Jdeschene,

Thank you. I'm glad to know that have reached sick, twisted and horrifying. This is definite improvement over the last draft. Now all I have to do is reach insane and to make sure that I am sufficiently well expressing the physical and mental medical conditions that people know who is going through what. If it takes a while to get there, so be it. I'm not working on a deadline.

I'll have to spend more time showing her mental condition before her initial feeding time. At what other points is clarity about her mental condition and emotions especially lacking? May as well hit the worst parts first.

I assume you meant the old man on the corpse of her captor? That was another hallucination, like the zebra and the toy soldier. She is 100% alone. That's the classic sort of delusion produced by sensory deprivation or white torture like this. I'll have to change that one into something more clearly a delusion. (Note to self) Maybe a giant rat?

"Holy Spirit" = the ventilation system in the cell and the white noise that is part of sensory deprivation torture. Hmm, going to have to change that.

Thanks again for your feedback. I really appreciate it!

Dr. Bob