User blog comment:TDKMC1/Not like anyone's going to read this anyway/@comment-10950063-20131117201643

Okay, I read through your stories.

I think a big problem in getting feedback is that two of them are extremely short. There's nothing to latch on to, much less give criticism about. Plus, they're ritual pastas. Those don't get a lot of attention and it's hard to critique them because they don't really show off any storytelling ability. So, that's 50% of your output that's difficult comment on.

The other issue is that your writing is fine. You're technically very proficient and you don't exhibit the same problems or habits that a lot of the writers on this site do. So, you're not going to get any tips on that kind of thing.

I would say you have two things to work on:

1. Personal style- Your writing felt a little generic. I don't know how to describe it. . . I read four pieces of work from you, but I never got a sense that they were yours. It felt like I went to the store and bought a box of CREEPYPASTA brand stories, not TDKMC1 stories. The big problem with this is the two longe stories were written almost a year ago. So, it's hard to gauge if this has improved at all. I can't give you any advice on this. It's something that develops through writing and reading.

2. Plotting- This is specifically about the two longer ones, obviously. The plots weren't great. That's fine, you can always make them work, but you need to give it some extra effort. "On Mirrors and Dreams" feels very rushed and because of that it almost feels more like a summary of a story. Flesh it out. Give us more of an idea of what it's like to deal with such a mirror. Detail, detail, detail. You say the reflection seems to change, but don't tell us how it changes. There's maybe three paragraphs about how the mirror is a problem and probably twice that with the finale.

That's what I have for you. Again, you're a good writer, you just need more practice.