Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20161117133231/@comment-25052433-20161123051407

Hey, sorry for the delay in response, been very busy with work and home. Anyway, I read this and found it very intersting. It had a rather Twilight Zone feel to it that was quite refreshing to read. There were quite a few grammar issues but they were pointed out in posts above this one. Make sure that you address those before you attempt to upload it.

As for the plot, I really liked it. As I said, it had a bizaar sort of narrative that was disjointed enough in its logic to really place a degree of unease into the reading. While there isn't too much explained and the ending didn't really satisfy the story, I still enjoyed it.

So, plot wise, I think it could have a great place on the site as one of the more weird stories. It was unique and well thought out. Just address the grammar issues and I think this will have a nice place here.