Talk:Red with White/@comment-26020349-20150118210243

This thing is awful. There is no suspense, and I am pretty sure a 4th grader wrote it. " My newly married husband..." Ah yes, as opposed to those unmarried husbands we all are familiar with. " We pulled into the abandoned parking lot, found a spot near the door and parked the car." If it is the parking lot for the hotel, and they had to search out a spot, it isn't really abandoned, is it? "... and would have left if not for the "vacancy" sign illuminated up front" So they would have left if not for the fact there was a room available? Well no shit, sherlock. You can't stay in a full hotel. "... I felt an overwhelming sense of unease but shrugged it off as a by-product of the long car drive." Of all the things that car rides can cause: tiredness, nausea, soreness, etc, I am pretty sure that unease isn't one of them. Has she considered that the source of the unease might be the fact that they are staying in the house from the Munsters? "... my husband gruffly replied." He just ignored your sense of impending doom and said it like an ass. Wow their marriage is off to a great start. <span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">"... <span data-rte-dragged="true" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">I quickly fell into a fitful sleep." That is like unsarcastically saying 'The race was off to a wonderful start, as I sat in my car struggling to start it'. <p data-rte-new-node="true"><span data-rte-dragged="true" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">"... <span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">he had a small, sharp knife." As opposed to all of the not sharp knives? I am just glad she had time to inspect the quality of the blade in her panicked state. <p data-rte-new-node="true">"<span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);"> <span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">I ran towards the door trying to open it and get out, only to find that it was locked and I was trapped inside. Seeing that I had no way out..." So either A. She is too stupid to unlock the door or B. She checked into an hotel room with the locks on the outside and thought nothing of it. <p data-rte-new-node="true"><span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">" <span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">I ran towards the window on the far side of the room. But it was in vain for that too was sealed shut." If only the window were made of something breakable like, I don't know, glass. <p data-rte-new-node="true"><span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">"... <span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">I thought to myself about how I lost my husband." And also all those pints of blood. <p data-rte-new-node="true">"<span style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">Years passed, and at last someone tried to pay me a visit." Oh it was a prequel that was somehow worse than the original. Did George Lucas write this? <p data-rte-new-node="true">2/10, Would riff again.