Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39380631-20190513192316/@comment-9041013-20190514194209

Basically like Nova said, it's a blend piece that lacks any connective content. Basically the major problem here is that the reader can't really relate to the OP in the story. Make him seem more like a real person, make us want to care about the guy so we'd feel bad when he gets eaten by this creature.

Give it some more real life feel, expand it a little, give us something to feel for.