Talk:The Puddle: Downpour/@comment-25326117-20160821021118

1) It gave no warning of its approach, following one of the hottest days on record.

2) However for me the real bad stuff happened after the rain had stopped and the sun took back its place overlooking the world below.  (Never start a sentence with But).

3) It was in the middle of a back road seldom used by people other than farmers or out-of-towners. (I don't think you need a - between back and road).

4) The puddle, if you could call such a thing that, not only pulled back when I jabbed it a third time but actually reared up like a cobra poised to strike.

5) He was right.   (Never start a sentence with and).

6)  Now we were trapped slap bang in the middle of them!  (Never start a sentence with and).

Good story, I am wondering how they will get rid of those puddles.