Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180705051303/@comment-5733573-20180705144438

DrBobSmith wrote: Jdeschene, I consider myself a rookie so admitting that I make rookie mistakes is OK. Would going third person solve the problem of the first person narrator not surviving? (It would allow me to get the story better qualified for the class of dismemberment.)

It was written this afternoon, over just a few hours. Maybe I should have reviewed it more carefully myself before going to writer's workshop but generally I find the opinions there very valuable. Third person would help a lot. You could even keep the limited POV in third person. As for dismemberment, I think you'd need a more graphic scene of the partner being torn apart or something similar to qualify for that.