Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20140627105357/@comment-25558572-20140630230530

Although this is a lengthy pasta, it's nevertheless entertaining to read and genuinely unnerving. I could tell that this took place in a post-apocalyptic world, and the journal entries of the protagonist do a good job of describing that. The 'beasts' were interesting creatures- we're never given a full description of them, so it's up to our minds to fill in the blanks, and that helped to make this story a scary one.

The only advice I can give at this point is to try to shorten this pasta if you can, although that's not necessary for the story. You made a handful of errors here and there, but your vocabulary, decsription and pacing are excellent. I would say a quick proofreading is all that's needed to make it into a creepypasta.