Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26235915-20150323103302/@comment-25941663-20150323143735

Before I start, what's up with the Greek title?

"regret waits for those who doesn't" shouldn't this be: "regret waits for those who don't"? Or am I missing something?

"much more worse" should be: "much worse"

"with every might" maybe this should be: "with all his might"?

"always fall onto Hell" -> "always fall into Hell"

"it was insignificant for him" -> "it was insignificant to him"

"it was strong was it could" -> "it was strong as it could"

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Sorry, but this just isn't creepy. It reads more like a weird article than a creepypasta. I kept waiting for a twist that never came. This was bland and uninteresting, I simply couldn't get myself immersed in the story.

The concept itself isn't bad at all, but there is only so much that you can do with the concept of hell and satan. If the story had a plot -maybe a character trying to escape from hell?- it would have definitely be interesting. But as of now, it isn't good.

You have pretty decent grammar, I didn't notice that many mistakes, but you have to be more careful. Sometimes your phrasing is a bit awkward, so you have to work on that a bit too.