Talk:Amazing World of Gumball - The Grieving/@comment-4849011-20150303011536

I didn't like this for a number of reasons. Here it gets harsh. 1. Unnecessary gore- Personally I thought there was no need for the graphic details. The writer could have said, "What they showed made me sick!" and/or given a vague description that left the details to the reader's imagination. Piling on the gore is a lazy plot device. 2. Claiming relatives in peril- I understand that writers on here, especially ones doing Lost Episode or Video Game pastas, claim, "This is a true story!" "This really happened!" etc. I get that. However, it bothered me that the writer felt the need to claim that her younger brother was missing and the parents were suspects. That's low. 3. The plot holes- Speaking of which, the brother and parents are brought up and then never mentioned again. Their fates are left up in the air. Like I said, that's low. Also, as someone pointed out to me yesterday, if this were a true story, if it had really happened the say the writer claimed, then she wouldn't have been able to show the actual title card. There are things in this story that the writer doesn't want us to think about. 4. The need to make the creator a monster- As if all that weren't bad enough, the writer, for whatever reason, felt the need to make the show's creator out to be a horrible monster who made a cartoon to mock a co-worker distraught over the death of a child! What the blazes? Slandering someone doesn't make the story better or you a better writer.

Thanks, but I prefer "The Amazing World of Gumball - The Virus".