Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20171214221911/@comment-7673575-20171223195041

The redux of your story is much, much better than the original, I'll say that.

As Umbrello pointed out, there are still several grammar, formatting, and punctuation errors, but these are few and minor, and now that Empy left, chances are that the story will survive long enough for me or someone else to give it one final polish.

Good job, and keep it up.