Talk:Ming/@comment-24146926-20131113211202

K, so I'll start with the things I like about the Pasta. It has relativley good grammer, a nice atmosphere, and the end was unexpected. The only things I had beef with was the sudden jump to the conclusion of that it's "The Devil's Cat", that's a bit strange for a family to say. Also, You might wanna cut out some of the pointless bits, like the medicine or that she's also reffered to as Mandy. Other than that, I thought it was pretty good. Fix those things and I'll say you have a bright future. :)