Talk:Sandstorm/@comment-24040907-20140711050133/@comment-3999760-20140713080032

Yeah, writing this was a bit of clutterfuck since I was never satisfied of the result. I didn't want the story to become overly long because it turns the reader away. I now realize that the ideas and concepts don't quite fit well with the short story format and begs for a revision. Thanks for the input, you're the first person who gave me a valuable critique since I uploaded this a year ago.