Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27123040-20151028190837/@comment-26425680-20151031032755

Well it's a step in the right direction, but it's still a long way from being finished. To start with, it's incredibly rushed. Here are some plot points you might want to expound upon:

-How does Vincent feel about his artwork? If he's sad when he sees how people react to his work, why does he keep painting?

-The interaction between Vincent and his art teacher should be much more detailed, and probably should include some dialogue. It's a pivotal moment in your story, so it needs more than just a mere description.

-When the painting comes to life and starts talking, that isn't the kind of creepiness you should be striving for. A story like this should derive its creepiness by being psychologically unsettling. It's a tacked on ending that doesn't really mesh with the beginning, and it doesn't explain anything.

Keep in mind, you're probably not going to be successful at this unless you put a great effort into it. People spend weeks, and even months, getting their pastas to the point where they're ready for public consumption. Writing is a skill that must be practiced and honed if you want to do well. My overall advice is that you need to have all your story's questions answered (in your mind) before you even begin writing. You should know the exact reason Vincent's paintings affect people the way they do (is Vincent possessed? Are the paintings possessed? Something else?). You don't have to outright tell your readers the reason, but you should at least drop enough hints so that they can draw their own conclusions. Make sure you understand the character's inner turmoil, and how people are going to react to him. And come up with a better ending, making sure that it meshes thematically and stylistically with what happened earlier. An example of a better ending would be to have Vincent slash at one of his paintings in a fit of rage, as he does this, slash marks appear across his back... he realizes that if he destroys his paintings, he'll destroy himself. Remember, that's just an example of one route you could take; I'm not saying you should for sure do this. Once you've fully immersed yourself into the story's world, only YOU will know the appropriate ending.

tl;dnr version - you need to practice, practice, practice on your writing skills, because you're not at the point where you can bang out a successful pasta in one day.