Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180630041028/@comment-24101790-20180630041803

This feels like something that would be a lot more effective if it were fleshed out to a full story. On top of that, for being two sentences long, you've got quite a few errors here. ((quotations missing from dialogue)Mommy, can I stay in your room tonight.(?) The walls won't stop staring at me.(quotations missing))

As it currently stands, this comes off more like a premise/hook than an actual effective story.