Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44610077-20200120202101/@comment-33904527-20200125002330

Author13 wrote: Thanks for the first paragraph. I needed that.

No to answer the second paragraph: 1) He knew the needle was injected into his head. He didn’t die instantly. 2)It’s just protocol. It’s the point. It’s why it’s A creepy pasta. 1) Even if the protagonist was aware that he was being injected, that doesn't change the fact that you can't have a pasta told in the first person where the narrator dies at the end. Either change the person, or find some way to incorporate the death into the story. Maybe have the narrator explain that he is telling the story 'from beyond the grave'.

2) You can't justify the ending as 'just protocol'. It needs to at least make logical sense. A mental hospital wouldn't start randomly killing its patients for no good reason. Go into detail, explain what this protocol is and what makes it so special.