Talk:The Blue-Faced Baby/@comment-31077845-20170210163843

You rely on the word "hear" 4 times (plus "here" once), including one instance in which you rhyme the word with itself. "Dear" is used 3 times, and "ears" is used 3 times. That made this  more of an exercise in repitition than a clever poem, and the whole thing just didn't sound good while a few lines just didn't make sense and were clearly filler. If a middle schooler was writing this I'd probably shrug and say "Eh, it's good enough", and that would only be because of the "drowned bucaneer" line, which was the only fairly good one in the whole poem. However this isn't a middle school language arts class, so I'm going to give it a rating of meh minus.