Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181128205448/@comment-9041013-20181129100146

Banned In CP wrote: I know what you mean by long and drawn out, bu that is part of the point of this, for there to not really be some epic thing, but slowly having death come nearer and nearer, while knowing there is absolutely nothing you can do to stop it.

I think maybe I could take out the first paragraph to help with that, as I think it does give away the bleakness of the end result.

And these aren't really meant to be strict interpretations of Waheela, but more of a nature spirit kind of thing, which is why they attack the main characters, because they're just going on a rampage and killing as many animals as they can.

I'll try to see what I can do for some kind of hope, though nothing really comes to mind

And the last sentence I cut off on purpose, it was supposed to be him not being able to write the last paragraph. Might be a little gimmicky, idk Ehh... I guess the whole unstoppable nature spirit who murders everyone is kind of not interesting enough, because you know, Godmode and all...

I also forgot to point out that the owner surprisingly doesn't come up to collect his keys from the boys... for the sake of plot. You have got to stop leaving these plot holes everywhere D=