Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25067835-20140617055617/@comment-25074573-20140617174906

I like your story. Would be nice if her (maybe his) death had an effect on the narrator. Something that gave a little something away about his nature or origin. Or something that could give a reader the feeling that he may also be manically loved by a person or a ghost. Something along the lines of

"If only my feelings could cry out. I am ready to kill for you and you havent even noticed. If someone had ever loved me this way I would have noticed. Right?"