Talk:The Witch of the Arder Dunes/@comment-25941663-20150810210956

I liked how fairy-tale like this was. I can't put my finger on it, but it has a feeling of old folk tales. Good work.

I have to point out that in the first sentence you write this:

"we must remind ourselves that evil is only rarely born; most of the times, it is created or rather: it is born."

Maybe this is meant as a joke, but I believe you should change the line. It sounded kinda weird, at least for me. I mean, you are writing "evil is rarely born" and then "it is born".

My other criticism is that at times your sentences run a bit too long and it was hard to keep up. You need to work on that, as it would improve your writing greatly.

All in all, this was an interesting read, not exactly creepy but entertaining nevertheless. I hope to see more of you in the future, I believe you have a lot of potential. Keep it up and well done.