Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29723173-20160823133749/@comment-28060931-20160823165029

All - hollows - eve[,] commonly known as Halloween. On this day of the year, children stroll around thier neighbourhood to collect candy in bags["to collect candy in bags" sounds wrong; try to eliminte the "in bags" part.During this time, many haunted houses open[,] and are the main attraction for teenagers and adults alike.

Every year during Halloween,I go out trick or treating with my buddies[,] Ian and Jun.Although we are teenagers,we still go out trick or treating just for fun.Haunted houses dont attract us[,] as I dont like being scared.

On this year[´]s Halloween,Ian and Jun decided that we should go [to a] Haunted Houses[no "s".I reluctantly agreed[,] and they sent me when they would pick me up.

When the clock hit 8:34PM, they honked at my driveway and I waved goodbye at my mother and father["waved my mother and father goodbye" sounds better].They discussed that we [to] are go to a cheap Haunted House[,] just a few miles away.I gazed at the moon as the night was a beautiful one.In 30 minutes[,] or so[,] we were there.I examined the house[,] and it looked as if nobody was home.

Ian and Jun got out from the car as I followed behind them.We rang the bell a few times with nobody answering.We decided we would find another one and started walking back to the car.Just as we were going in the car,a voice shouted[,]

"Hold on! I[']m coming"

This definitely shocked us[,] and we turned our heads to the house.The man yelled again

"Are you here from the haunted house?"

"Yes" Ian mumbled

"I saw the ad[d] and it stated that it is 5$ per person,could we pay after we finished?" asked Jun

"Its on the house[,] but you have to take turns" replied the man[full stop at the end of every sentence]

We decided that Jun would go first.As soon as Jun stepped inside,I asked Ian

"What do you think will be in there?"

"Probably the same old stuff im guessing" replied Ian

After 10 minutes of chatting,Jun came running out with tears in his eyes.

"What happened?" I asked

"Are you okay?" Asked Ian

Jun didn't respond and just cried non-stop.Ian was up next and I assured him that I would take care of Jun while he went in the house.

I tried to ask what Jun saw and he said

"M-m-monsters....looked....like human......"

Of course,he spoke brokenly but I could understand.

Over the course of 10 minutes I tried calming Jun down to no avail.

Just after 11 minutes counting the 10 minutes I spent trying to calm Jun down,Ian came out.

He had no emotion in his face,only some scratches on his forehead.

After a full minute of silence thinking about this,it hit me

Jun probably hallucinated the 'monsters' while Ian dreams of hellcats scratching him and he probably acted out his dreams while awake.

During the period of time in which I was thinking about what happened and the conclusion I came up with,I was dragged into the house by the man and the door slammed shut by the man outside.I panicked and frantically tried to bust open the door but it was futile,I need to finish this house to get out.

I do not dare to think about what awaits me.

As 5 minutes of silence passes by,I saw a door that had a word on it

'EXIT' it spelt.I rushed to the door without thinking about turning back.

Oh how I wish I didnt open the door.

I was met with darkness....soon I could see a silhouette of a man...standing just like me...

It stared at me with its piercing eyes while I stared back.Every second I withstood felt like an eternity.

I now know the purpose of this house..to show people thier greatest fears.

I got ready for anything that was about to hit me.

But nothing did.

I open my eyes expecting to see the silhouette just in front of me,revealing its face.

But I saw it at the place it had been this whole time...

I now realise that its a...

Mirror