Talk:A Final Goodbye/@comment-24101790-20150629012832

First and foremost, kudos on the emotional punch you delivered with your story. It really built good characters and a strong story.

There were only a few small errors, which I corrected. They were small and hardly enough to detract from the overall story.

The only real drawback I saw was the ending. I think a little more explanation needs to be made about the accident as it seems a bit off that people responding to the scene of the accident wouldn’t find Avery’s body as well as Helen’s. The song is utilized well with the lyrics at the opening, although having it as the ring tone seemed lightly forced. All in all, it is a good story and I’m glad that you had that song assigned to you as you did a wonderful job with it.