Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180503003144/@comment-35447404-20180505150807

Disturbing. I like it. Though I must confess my first reaction from Reading the very beginning was to google up Lacey Stroh. Must confess my search came empty handed. The way the text opens talking about her as if a notorious case made me search it. If it isn't a notorious case you should talk about her as a friend, otherwise most people will have the kneejerk reaction to google her and I think that breaks the flow of the story. If it is a notorious case, then execuse my ignorance (also your text would be disrespectful, so I hope I'm right)... Also the way she talks about regretting nothing and then suddenly changes to Cindy I love you, though it made me question her sanity, was incoherent from a writing standpoint. Maybe it is what you were going for, but I prefer the person slowly breaking down. That's my kind of crazy. The idea with the desalinator was inspired. And it makes perfect sense. Cruel, but real. Loved it! Unless she was a real person, which would make you a revolting person (really hope I'm wrong here, and you are a loving and caring individual)...