User blog comment:BlackLights666/Um poor quality???/@comment-5021425-20140904051451

okay, me again...

The story had potential, but like Jeff the Killer, it lacked some logic. Suffered from the same problems as the paranormal activity movies. there comes a point when the character has to stop writing rationally and go, well, insane. Unless the character is remembering what happened, there is no reason for the character to be as calm as you made them out to be.

Sort of tooting my own horn, but read my story He Without a Face, and you can see how something like this can be done.