Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20170215123526/@comment-24101790-20170216042208

I can't guide you any more than that as then I'd end up ghost-writing the story and no one would be happy with the results. As it stands, it feels like the story needs more characterization (intentions/reasons for being in the scenario)/plot development (what led them to this point and what could happen next) and building up of the horror to be effective as it seems like the woman just having a mutilated face doesn't really go much beyond the concept of the reveal. Think of Phantom of the Opera, what is the Phantom's and protagonist's intent, what happens when the mask is removed (hint: the movie/play doesn't just end there) for both characters, etc.? Fleshing out these concepts would strengthen the story.