Talk:Repressed/@comment-26188405-20160101063831

I don't like how self-referential the ending lines are. "People like me know"? Okay, who cares?

Also the line,  " Bodies of skinned creatures lie about, coupled in demonic imagery,"  makes the rest of your despcription unnecessary. Instead of saying "coupled in demonic imagery" why don't you instead just describe the 'demonic imagery'? Having both makes one of them redundant.

Also,   " There is a world out there so different from our own, and yet so similar" ? I know creepypasta writing is mostly just piggybacking on other peoples' works, but jeez, could you get any more cliche? "There is a *blank*, that seems so different, yet what people fail to realize is that it's a parallel to our own *blank*!" Should I be shocked? Just tell the story. This doesn't build suspense for anyone above a seventh grade reading level.

Couldn't be bothered to read the rest. 2/10 for trying.