Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5034925-20140409181725/@comment-4832646-20140410142634

For one, like everyone else is saying, this is only a shock value thing. For another thing, there's LITERALLY NO PLOT or any connective details putting things together. You are jumping subjects more than you're telling a story.

On top of that, the shock value just spoils the story. I found myself sickened, which isn't a good thing. But on that note, how come you're easily able to put an image of a guy imagining his wife as his sister and fucking her, and an image of her getting killed in a car pile-up, but nothing else?

Not to mention, THERE'S NO ENDING. You cliff-hangered us and then ended the letter. There needs to be something else. Your story just raises questions - and not the good kind.

And the "P.S". How does that contribute to the story? Are you trying to make us sick, or are you trying to tell a story?

On another note, if you're going to write about a real killer, you should study it carefully. More than just one website. And use your imagination to fill in the holes.