Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24941775-20140515130626/@comment-9967354-20140515140548

Resident DeVir wrote:

You could mention something about how it was Ahab's dying wish to be reunited with his dog, and since that couldn't be done in the real world, he searches through the game world. Or maybe Ahab died looking for his dog?

Haunted video games aren't allowed on the site, so adding a ghost element will lead to an immediate deletion. That is certain.

As for your pasta, it's a wee bit cliche'd because of the depressed NPC acting out of character bit. Maybe you could try a different approach. Video game pastas are hard to write because creepy ideas get used up by almost everyone and then come down to parodies. But maybe-no, surely, because you are a good writer, you can come up with something scarier than this.