Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5952769-20170125115538/@comment-28428152-20170331181203

Paragraph 17: "I wonder who her mind accused of writing the letters." This sentence, personally, I think, would be better replaced with a reference to the group of freshman boys that was mentioned in the first version. It makes the reader wonder if perhaps the narrator is one of those boys, only to then be told no in the following sentence. I think it would add to the mystery, though this suggestion isn't bery important.