Talk:Sister's Computer/@comment-5733573-20180915161240/@comment-36393004-20180915162122

I enjoyed this too, it was an interesting concept. I agree with all of Jdeschene's comments. I only want to add that you might want to change the blood stained clothes part to say something like.

"He lifted up the clothing upon the seat to notice a tiny blot of blood within the center of it."

I only say this because if she had been shrunken down to such a small size, the blood that remained wouldn't be covering her clothing. It would be a spot, much like you would find when crushing a bug.

Just a thought.