Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25625273-20160730084828/@comment-28266772-20160730092542

Hey,

I'd love to offer feedback on your story. At a glance the writing seems competent, but unfortunately it's formatted so that it's a wall of text. These are extremely off putting and make it hard to read much more than a few sentences. Could you format this story (you can edit your original post) so that it has paragraphcs please?