Talk:The Attic in the Basement/@comment-24190515-20141126152406

I groaned when I saw the word "whilst" used in the first sentence. "while" and "whilst" are interchangeable in most cases, and I find the word "whilst" a bit pretentious. At least you didn't use it throughout the story, as some writers do.

HOWEVER... I am extremely glad that I didn't give up when I read the dreaded word. What a great story! Aside from a few misspellings, the sentence structure was good and the plot was fantastic. It's hard to come by a truly original idea these days.

As for the protagonist trying the window, I can see why you glossed that over. I mean, in every horror movie, there's always a part when we scream "Don't go in there!" If the characters always made the obvious choices, then it wouldn't be much of an interesting story, would it?

(i.e. The killer was in the house! Mary Sue left the house, went next door, and called the police. The end.)