Talk:Loving Intentions/@comment-24466828-20151106205020

This is a pretty good story but I have 2 issues with it.

1) I think that the story should've elaborated more on Walter because it didn't seem very convincing for him to kill June and himself just because she was dying. I think that the story should've mentioned that he had anger issues or he was going crazy. That way, it would make his act more realistic.

2) I was able to predict the plot twist from a mile away. It didn't work on me as well as I hoped it would've.

I'll give this a 6/10.