Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4832646-20140812015555/@comment-4832646-20140812223919

EmpyrealInvective wrote: Didn't notice too many errors, you got most of the accents for dropping letters (Missed 'bout twice. Bout=a strenuous burst of activity, 'bout=colloquialism)

Additionally if you have dialogue continuing on over paragraphs, you don't have to include a closing quotations (Uness there's a break in the story, or interruption.) If you use closing quotations at the end of one paragraph and continue dialogue, you have to reestablish who's speaking. The start of every new paragraph does require opening quotations I believe. (Here's an example of how it works.

I think if you're going for a little bit of existential horror, you could find some way to flesh out the skeleton's fate/suffering. (To maybe reinforce that the end wasn't instantaneous and the skeleton had plenty of time to pray/supplicate and wait for the prayers to be unanswered.) Maybe claw marks in the stone showing how they tried to claw themselves free? You can probably think of a better one than me if that's the direction you want to take it.

All in all, I gotta say it was an interesting story. The ending could use a little more resolution/climax, but it was an enjoyable read and it kept me engaged through-out. I don't believe I closed any quotations without interrupting the story. At least, not that I could see.