Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20190508225431/@comment-9041013-20190510205939

RedNovaTyrant wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: Well Im not a fan of this overly colorful high speed plot you've come up with here but it works way better than the previous version, in my humble. If I had to write something like that, which I kind of did, I'd go for 8 - 10 thousand words and beyond, flash out as much as I can and build and construct a whole world around the plot.

Way for more opinions, I say.

I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be my "consciousness was semi intact" not "my conscious"

Oh and as for the naming, for a fancier acting cultists, use a name from some none Christian faith for Hell for the harder drug. Maybe Sheol or Mictlan or something. I'm afraid 6000 words is the limit for the contest, currently sitting at 4600. Would it be better to have the narrator arrive at the club, them not be open, then have to wait a week til next Friday for the next time it's open, enduring the torture of withdrawl over that time and writing about that?

Good eye. It was supposed to be consciousness, I'll fix that up.

And I like Sheol. I might come up with something. Thank you. Yeah it was just my opinion in general the length bit. I think this should work fine enough with some minor revisions because the imagery is great.