Talk:On a Lonesome Road/@comment-24040907-20140919051929

Alright, it's the middle of the night and I'm off to a great start on my little marathon of reading every entry in this series! This episode was quite interesting, had a clever writing style, smooth flowing-dialogue, and was of course pretty scary. I found myself able to blend into Olivia's shoes with ease while you described to me her fear and anticipation whilst dreaming of the mailbox.

In the first half of the story, while the schoolchildren are discussing things on the bus, there are many references made to shows I have never heard of (with the exception being the Twilight Zone") that went on just slightly longer than I would have preferred. A minor detail that I wouldn't consider changing, because it will most likely provide other readers with a sense of nostalgia. Lastly, the children all speak with distinctive English grammar, yet you mentioned in another comment something about a California location. I'm curious as to where this town, Curtisville, is located.

I digress, for now it is time for chapter two!