Talk:Alternate 21328/@comment-5547824-20150610101940

This seemed better than the first overall, but there were still a lot of things that kind of stuck out for me. How he gets the Nazi armband felt so completely out of nowhere that I actually stopped reading right there. It felt very random and I don't know why he couldn't have just made the thing or something.

The only problem that's worse in this story than the first is the fact that this feels a lot more like a very cliched anime than it does a creepypasta. Neither story was bad, but still very meh.