Talk:Dolbeer in Winter--Part Two/@comment-25941663-20170506231619

This was a nice read. Certainly one of my favourites of yours. Vocabulary was spot on and the tone fitted the themes perfect. On top of that, the descriptive work here is excellent and very vivid. You certainly have a flare-y imagination and that produces amazing characters, situations and settings. It really is fascinating reading about the lore, the little stories and folk tales, the different creatures etc. you write about.

The only issue I see with this as creepypasta is that it doesn't have enough creepy sauce. At the start you had a section where Pierard was walking back home through the storm. That was excellent and suspenseful. Unfortunately the moment stands alone as the sole truly suspenseful and scary scene in the whole story. I'm not saying that this is in general bad, but in this site we host scary tales, and this is not very good as one. I would suggest trying to amp the creep-o-meter a bit higher. The characters, creatures and settings you come up with have a ton of potential to be horrifying, but you are not tapping into it.

Overall, a very good story, but it lacks in the scariness department.