Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20181121135933

This is my story it might not be perfect like some I tried to send, but if someone help me correct some errors or tell me what I should really do I will appreciate it.

A baby girl was on the month of June 1920, They named her Sarah they a loved her same when she was a little girl, they always take care of her since she is their precious little girl. Sarah and her parents always go to a friend house, they visit him since Sarah was born, but they doesn't know his secret because he always hiding it.

"Well Markus, how is work???" say Sarah's father to him, "Its fine, I guess," say Markus to him has they came to his yard to drink some tea, they always talk with each other, "Mom can I go play in the sand???" say Sarah to her mother, "Of course!" say her mother to Sarah as she go play with some dolls she brought to play in the sand.

As they take some tea, "well I should know what kind of work you do?" say Sarah's mother to Markus, "Oh nothing much, just some dolls that I keep in there," say Markus to her, because he didn't want to be too suspicious about his work, since they heard that some children are missing in their town, Sarah was still playing with her dools, when she she heard something like an knock on the window, curious she get up and approached the window.

Her mother then called her, "Sarah we're going home now!!!", the little girl then answer "I'm coming!!!" she say running to her parents and forget about the knocking on the window, but during the night she didn't feel well as she had nightmares about someone hurting her or knocking at her window.

She's waking up and look around then on the corner of her room she look at the wall as a person seem to be standing  there watching her, Sarah wanted to scream unfortunately she still silent, still looking at the person as she walk toward her and she see it was a girl from her age, but she as buttons instead  of her eyes and was dressed like a doll. Sarah then scream and waking up her parents who enter her room, "Sarah what's wrong" say her mother worried about her,  'did you see her" say Sarah  still scared, "who honey???"say her father who doesn't who's his daughter was talking about, "I see a girl,she was right there," say Sarah to her parents who look at each other with an worry look thinking that their daughter just had an nightmare as they see nothing.

WQhen the morning came Sarah was awake, but she didn't sleep well since she see that girl,  of course her parents are thinking that she was just her imagination, but she did know what she see that night it was real for her. She didn't sleep we after it, the next day the family go again visit their friends.

Sarah wasn't feeling well, "Its okay honey don't be scare," say her mother to her, "I know,but something doesn't feel right in there," say Sarah to her parents who begin to really worry about her, they then talk to Markus about Sarah's problem, "Well i can give her a peek in my shop!" say markus to them wich Sarah's parents agree thinking that it was nothing to worry about. Sarah then nod and followed Markus to his shop, thinking that she will normal dolls when they finally enter the shop Markus take Sarah's by the end and lead her in the back.

"Where are we going???" asked Sarah to him, "I am bringing inside the doll house," reply Markus to her, they walk in an dark alley sarah begin to be afraid because her parents still outside and doesn't know what really going on, she would have run, but it was dark she doesn't see nothing. She heard an doror open in front of her then light went on, that's where she see it and wanted to scream because Markus brought her in workshop where it was full of children corpses dress as dolls their eyes are remplaced by buttons and the mouth was sew and shut.

"Welcome to my workshop and you will be the perfect doll of my collection!" say Markus, of course it was the words Sarah did heard just before being killed by him, her parents then called the cops after Sarah's was missing at their friend house, but officers found nothing and no one know what really happen to her. 