Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24189254-20150612000542/@comment-25170312-20150612001803

I just skimmed it, but it looks pretty good. However, I don't know if I would consider it horror. It's more like a classic war story. Yes, it displays the horrors of war, but that kind of horror is a totally different realm. Maybe I'm wrong, as I know there are war themed pastas on the wiki, but I would expect them to have elements of horror beyond just "war gore". It looks like you packed a lot of emotion into the story, which is good.

On a technical note, please break up the dialogue so that each time someone new is speaking it is a new paragraph. If you are left with any huge paragraphs after that, please break them up a little.