Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25569708-20150628044653/@comment-25569708-20150630225655

Oh wow, I didn't notice any of those! I have found due to my writing style, some words get mangled, misplaced, and even lost somehow. XD Once again, thanks a bunch for taking the time to proofread my pasta. I updated again with the following changes:

o A new paragraph hyping the incident

o Smoothing out the description of the channel a bit

o Protagonist got used to TVs again

o New sentences and better sentences throughout

o Another new paragraph at the end

Enjoy!