Talk:The Skeleton Woman/@comment-5306249-20200130191436

Thematically I think this pasta is pretty fair. You did well on descriptiveness. I think you just need to tune up some of the grammar (ei: "running rough fingers through Her limbs), and the format is leaning towards a poem type format but without totally committing. So you might have to rework it to make the narrative flow smoother ((either nix the rhyme scheme and keep it as a standard narrative, or rewrite the existing story into a poem format)).