Talk:Became/@comment-25226524-20160116190010/@comment-26326346-20160116193807

Thanks for the review! I'm glad that the flow started to pick up as you read. The flow was something that I was worried about, since this is the largest thing I've written (which in turn causes me to agree with you about it being too many words, because this was approaching miniature novel length). I am considering taking a bone-saw to this a couple of times after the contest results have come back and trying to remove around 10% of the text.

I have bookmarked those links and am going to spend some time doing and redoing those exercises, thanks for those! I actually still have those old links that you recommended to me from when I first joined the site bookmarked.

Alright, time for a reread!

Thank you, Jay! I appreciate the feedback :D