Talk:I'm Fine/@comment-27553469-20160201163632

It was okay. The grammatical errors often lead away from the story. The story was kind of thrown together, and could use a bigger picture on highlighting the main points occuring throughout the storyline. There was quite a lot of repetition with the same things going on over and over again that weren't exactly needed. It made the "twist" at the end a little anticlimactic and expectedly bland. However, the character development was quite well and the story wasn't bland--it kept the reader scrolling. I'd give it a 6/10; improvement is needed, but still a nice read.