Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28754051-20160615072326/@comment-28266772-20160616145051

I haven't started the second half yet but I don't recommend you change the diary format. I don't agree that the style is too good for a journal. Journal's are very subjective things and if someone wants to fill theirs with description it's not something I would question - especially if the purpose of that journal was to kill time while they struggled to sleep.

The journal format works as far as I'm concerned. I just think you might want to consider each entry and what it contributes to the story, and eliminate redundancies to keep things shorter. I'll offer more in-depth feedback some time tomorrow, but for now I don't think you need to change the format to prose.