Talk:Subject 16/@comment-10435568-20131222185055

You do realize that bulimia and anorexia, while both eating disorders, contradict each other, right? Bulimia is when you binge on food and then throw it up, and anorexia is when you barely eat at all and excersize for hours at a time. Both are done typically to lose a lot of weight. You can have one, but you can't have both. Unless you have a split personality as well.

And as for the stroy, it needs work. You say that Salazar's gender isn't known, but why does the narator refer to him/her as a "she"? ("If the doctors never touched Salazar, how did she become Subject Sixteen?”)

Also, some things could definitely be phrased in such a way that would be more natural to read and more terrifying for the reader. For example, the narrator seems to not care about what they're saying. At one point you have them say, "I think their names went something like David and Julie". That's just lazy, not properly choosing a name for your characters. There's no need for the narrator's blaze attitude, and it doesn't make the character more realistic.

One more thing: slow down at the end, there's no need to just have a whoosh of information. Maybe have the main character figure it out by him/herself? You know, through the old fashioned "hear about it from a nutjob, snoop around a bit, get pieces of the puzzle, then have someone tell you the rest?"

 In short, this story needs to be looked over, although it isn't awful.