Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26364137-20150503164429/@comment-26364137-20150503205824

SoPretentious wrote: Here's my thoughts:


 * 1) Paragraph four is too lengthy.
 * 2) I unpurposely changed position |Unpurposely is not a word, even with a dash (un-purposely) it sounds clunky and awkward. A new word would be better.
 * 3) However, It did not look like | "It" should not be capitalized.

The story is great in my opinion.

Thank you very much for your feedback! Number 2. is clear evidence that english is not my native language. I will surely do something about all these "faults" in my next draft. I'm really happy you liked it!