Talk:The Moon Children/@comment-25477067-20160202163149

Overall, very unsatisfying, Especially the poem at the end. The poem felt like you had rhymed yourself into a corner and had to look up words to rhyme your way out again. Not all poems have to be in AAAA format, you know. Also, it would benefit from formatting. Instead of a wall of text, do this:

The shining moon is bright tonight, so do not stray away,

for if you do not heed my word,  you shall hear them say:

"Do you see the moon tonight?"

It gives me quite a horrid fright,

despite the word that might be trite,

to think about it late at night.

The everlasting 'moon'."