Talk:The Dare/@comment-25340844-20140905153808

What you've written is pretty good. It feels incomplete, though. I'd like to know more about the painting and what it really was. Maybe a little exchange at the start with Thomas' friends actually issuing the dare. We don't really get a chance to know any of the characters, so the reveal that Thomas disappeared without a trace doesn't hit as hard as it could, in my opinion. I'd also be interested in hearing the rumors associated with the house.

To be clear, I did enjoy reading this, but I wish there was more too it. In it's current state it gets a 4/10 from me. More story would raise that to an 8/10, provided it was written as well as this section was.