Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20190201203454/@comment-9041013-20190202103452

"First rule of Fight Club, you do not talk about Fight Club."

This applies here so well, you can't try to convince me that Reddit stories are real, I mean, I got an account banned because people thought a post I made was taking things too far, even though it was fictional. So, yeah... no... I can't buy into this narrative at all.

Your ending does not fix the situation, at all... because, why the fuck would you click that link or reply to that email, after you've read the messages content? You'd have to be having Lil Xan's mental capacity to do that. I don't think the majority of people are that stupid.

Also, spam mail is spam mail... even if you read it, you don't take it seriously.

Now onto the characters, how can this Maria give me an educational speech on not opening spam mail and net privacy security. How can she then go on and act out a "Oh, I've commited an oopsy"

Come on, don't insult my (a reader's) attention span.

Also, supernatural killer, or is it Jeff The Killer out-of-no-where-godmode possessing killer? If you want a supernatural killer that uses the internet to find prey, please make it stand out from the "Oh shit... something's gonna kill me" trope, because this one is just bad. Give him some characteristics, do something with him/it.