Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32289854-20180308164744/@comment-32289854-20180320182547

Kolpik wrote: I'd like to know why neither George or Carl seemed interested in the van that ran them off the road. Sure, they were focused on Mikey disappearing and getting help, but I think you're missing a great opportunity to add some anxiety or even fear to the story. They've just been run off the road and the boy is missing. Did the big bad van guy (yep, I said big bad van guy) get Mikey? Is the big bad van guy (there it is again) coming back to finish them off? This story definitely has potential, but it runs kind of flat after the car wreck. Good luck on this one. I love a good side of the road ghost story, and with a bit of work this could certainly fit the bill for me.

Thank you, Kolpik! I've revised it with your suggestions, and then some.