Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31532017-20170215123526/@comment-31532017-20170216041042

EmpyrealInvective wrote:

RaptorKillerX-Venture wrote: Hmm, I thought the dialogue alone would indicated that he was terrified to have the conversation; thus he tried to sweet talk away from having the liaison. Would him also having to show his nervousness while talking, be enough to fix all those issues? For the hand part, guess I'll change it a bit. It still feels like there's more that could be done to make this premise more effective. Ah, what exactly am I missing here? I don't really know what more I could do with this premise, having the male becoming the ghost/monster; would significantly reduce the story's already established twist.

Or would I have to heavily rely upon descriptions as much as possible instead of characterization?