Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30771515-20170214100658/@comment-30771515-20170218042130

Derpyspaghetti wrote: Okay. Since this was a longer pasta I didn't go through with the grammar, but multiple areas have awkward wording, punctuation, and other things. I would recommend reading your story out loud to yourself before posting it on the main site. Other than that, this was an enjoyable read. The plot was good, and the story tied in well to the rest of the BBHHFH saga. I liked it. I think with some minor editing, this could easily go up on the main page. Hey derp, just edited it to all the suggestions, if you can read it and let me know if I fixed the problems it would be deeply appreciated.