Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25269564-20181112121018/@comment-9041013-20181112201836

Well it has a certain magic to it, feels a lot like the original Halloween, I guess you drew from that.

I kind of liked it, this portrayal of a Michael Myers-esque character, it does give you a sense of a horror plot that is both real and unreal. I mean, I did not get scared or anything, but it was an enjoyable read for the most part because the plot oozes "horror setting" throughout.

At some points it doesnt make sense, like the "pure evil" motivating your character, these things don't really exist. and Psychopaths, sadists, you name them, they all have a motivation that is beyong "being evil for the sake of being evil". Even dare I say the evilest of pathologies, Sadism, has a reason behind it - the suffering of others brings a sadist his pleasure. So your killer dude is kind of, not exactly that good. Maybe add something to him that makes him more supernatural in nature or give us hints of his psychological status from within the plot. Don't make him an evil for the sake of evil kind of guy. It works with Myers (in the original film) because it was a new concept in Horror and cinema. Here it just won't fly that high - there has to be a reason to his so called evil. Be it a botched "mystic" practice his mother took part in when she was pregnant with him or years of abuse we are told about at the end of the story as a possible reason by the doctor who ends up dismissing it as "never been proven"

Also, try to re-do this story a little but from your own personal perspective, meaning, imagine how would you feel if you were being haunted down by a 6"5 emotionless killing machine for no apparent reason and put it on the paper. As of now it feels like a more tell than show... which ruins it. Make me feel the feelings of the pratagonist through the words you write here.

Also, your tenses felt a little off at points, I might be just really tired, but at points I felt like you were randomly switching between past and present between the paragraphs, so do proof read that thing.