Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37482493-20190303051640/@comment-9041013-20190304004047

Well for starters this isn't exactly original, an internet thing gone wrong because reasons isn't a new topic in here. It's not exactly scary either because it usually comes off as wonky and unbelievable. On top of it all. How nobody ever notices these things? Momo got shut down in about two weeks when people were legitly starting to freak out.

What is this thing even supposed to be for real, a data collector, a trojan sort of virus, or just an app people distrusted?

Also the ending takes any sort of effect you might have wanted this to have and throws it out of the window. What's the scare in this?

On top of everything, your English needs a myriad of work.

I suggest dropping off the spooky internet thing and just making a story about a media thing that is supposed to be really scary and is good at it's purpose.