Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25410869-20140914075109/@comment-25418458-20140915035748

another thing would be to not star it of so cliche. Say it as if he dwells around you and you don't know to much about him, then slowly reveal what you do know. Also, don't use scare words to often such as :  "I need you..." He tilted his head in such a demented way, as though he meant to be looking at me. Try re-phrasing that so it leaves a more haunting and lasting effect. Also don't rush a story maybe take a few months out to revise it so it sounds good. Also, take time to develop you characters fluidly so they mix beautifully with the story.