Talk:Displeasure Beach/@comment-24281984-20141117193910

This one had a fairly good setup and was interesting, although I'm a little unclear about what happened towards the ending. It seemed like the narrator was actually one of the creatures described, although I don't have too clear an idea what those were, either. More of an explanation to these would be a welcome addition.

The writing itself was decent, especially at the first half of the story. I liked how you used enough words to show what the city looked like, but it didn't drag on so long that the story was halted. So while this could be lengthened somewhat, it is fine as is and a fairly surprising twist on the typical post-apocalyptic theme.