Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27024716-20140514024055/@comment-24821182-20140514085325

I like how the main character just automatically assumes that the girl is causing the disappearances and people's change in behaviour. The only thing he has to base his entire theory on is that the girl stared at the people before they vanished.

And why did the parents decide to move? Did they fear people were going to blame the girl, based on some kids observation? Does their daughter actually have any supernatural powers, and were they aware of them?

Anyway, apart from some errors in tense and a misspelling of "their", the grammar is all right, and if you make it more logical to blame the girl for the disappearances, it could be a good story.