Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20150112025033/@comment-24101790-20150116000407

Some minor things I noticed: "Late September." should be "late September". "I thought this was really strange, because this island's suppose (supposed to) be uninhabited.", "Its (It's)just cake.", "I just though (thought) I heard rats."

Capitalization: I'm not sure if gorgon should be capitalized or not. You do with Lontaqas so I would assume the same holds true. "Oh Crud!", "Kes frowned. "I wonder what did in the demon I found," she mussed. (mused)", "'cause if (it) doesn't…" (Just control+F to find these things for review)

There are also formatting issues at each chapter/the end/and "Cold Curse Files". You can center these using TEXT to put them in the center if you wish. (Although the with chapters, a header would be easier.)

While I'm not a huge fantasy reader. (I do enjoy a few.) I enjoyed the first couple of chapters and am interested to find out what happens next. (It kind of reminded me a little of The Visitor from Curtisville, another one of yours which I enjoyed reading.). The story has some mythological elements gorgons, Hecate, etc that might confuse less astute readers (like myself), but it's not a large issues. The story does a good job of blending fantasy with some supernatural/horror elements. As a bigger fan of horror, I would have liked a little more emphasis on the horror elements, but that may be addressed in the follow-up story.

I hope this critique was helpful, sorry I'm a bit out of my element with these types of stories and can't give you much in the way of plot/story advice, but I get the feeling you don't really need it. Semicolon closing parenthesis.