Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27027028-20160120173439/@comment-27027028-20160121174126

ggguuhhhh. so the original story was better. ok. polishing. a skill i need to work on. and the reason i don't have him find out what they are is, he's just some random guy. it's not like he's gonna find some big conspiracy, it's ridiculous. but i do see how it could help. hmm. i'll polish the original up. it seems like the better of these two versions. i'm working on it.