User blog comment:With Teeth/Pasta Opinions/@comment-24480175-20140330195545

The story has some potential, but has a generic killer and grammatical problems. Also, I doubt psychologists would just say "we can't help you". It could use some improvement, but is a decent start/draft, nonetheless.

Also, as LOLSKELETONS pointed out, this is something that would be better off posted in the Writer's Workshop forum.