Talk:The Nightmare Drug/@comment-27012445-20180718032642

Not bad at all. The only critique I have is I would revisit the last paragraph and clean up the wording a bit. It feels very rushed like you were trying to bring the story to a close a quick as possible. I have been guilty of that myself. I wouldn't go overboard and add more information, just make some improvement on the word flow in that last paragraph and you should be all set