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BloodySpghetti wrote: NoTimeCreepy wrote: I'd like to know how he knows so much about her. No background for it. Well, he could've stalked her for a while.

So he hates woman, great, but why? I mean, the random psychopathic sadist that has no basis for his pathologies is a rampant plot scheme over here. It is mostly boring because it doesn't reflect on real-life Psychopaths or pathological Sadists. They have a reason and a purpose to their killing.

Andrei Chikatilo was a pathological sadist, he literally could not get off to regular sex. He had to hurt people to get turned on, this coupled with the fact that he was mocked for his perceived sexual impotence is what drove him to commit a bunch of rapes and murders perpetrated against women and girls. He probably hated women, but again, his pathology made him appear impotent which drove women to mock him causing him further distress that turned into hatred.

Ted Bundy just did things because he could, he blamed the pornography he witnessed as a child for him developing a violent sexual and murderous appetite however it's probably that his unique brain structure (which is common in Psychopaths), that had him experience a greater production of endorphins and greater feelings of pleasure from this hormonal production, coupled with the impaired ability to judge between good and bad and his lack of care for such terms is what drove him to commit the crimes he became known for. He was hunting for a thrill, simply put.

Ed Kemper, a Psychopath who is also a probable genius and currently a model inmate who helps the system deal with people like himself. He described feeling intense rage and hatred in the forms of urges to hurt people. All of that stemmed from his strained relationship with his mother, as he got himself to get caught after killing her and her friend.

Golden State Killer, also a sadist who by chance has a Micropenis... and is known to have screamed at himself about how much he hates himself and plans on killing himself and the like, so you get the picture.

Alexander Pichushkin, the Chess Killer, was a normal kid until he hit his head on a swing one day, possibly causing neurological damage that had lead to originally just a violent temper and antisociality. He could only control his violent urges through Chess, the game in which he excelled, describing the notion of beating his opponents in a cerebral competition as a good enough way to assert his dominance, however, this did not work out for long enough and before long he started murdering people in what he originally hoped to be a Chess inspired murder spree spanning 64 victims like the number of checkers on the Chessboard. He later took this statement back claiming he would've just kept on killing indefinitely if he wasn't apprehended. Basically, neurological damage made him violent and murderous.

Ed Gein was a schizophrenic who was influenced by his misogynistic mother to believe that all women are evil and that she is the most important person around him, leading him to possibly murder his brother when he stood up to their mother and to kill a few women and keep their bodies around. His strict religious upbringing might've also contributed to his delusions that he could communicate and raise the dead.

All of these prolific serial killers have a reason to be murdering people, beyond the preachy religious, bigoted set of ideas you've presented with Eyeball Jack.

What makes this guy care so much? Did a woman hurt him? did he have problems in his sex life, was he a delusional man? what drove him to murder people. There has to be something.

I do like his name, however, as it makes complete sense and has a throwback feel to Victorian Era serial killers, such as Jack The Ripper and the lesser-known, comically nicknamed more recent, Jack The Stripper, a murderer who stripped all of his victims.

So, if you get to make this guy into a real serial killer, this story might be worthwhile, for now, it's just meh. Feels like you're trying to one-up Jeff The Killer and Eyeless Jack. Eyeball Jack is a deconstruction of Jeff the Ripoff characters. However, I could explore his philosphy of women being whores and show how it developed.

One serial killer who always stuck out to me is Dean Arnold Corll. That guy was just insane. He had a somewhat normal childhood as well. I'm convinced he soldifed the idea of homosexuals being pedophiles to the public.

For reference, Charles Albright is the main inspiration for Eyeball Jack. He's a psychopath obessed with eyes.

Again, trying to keep it a mystery, but I know who the main character will be. The father of one of the victims who investigates the killings.