Talk:So Much for My Complexion!/@comment-25941663-20161130223818

This was a very creepy read. I was genuinely scared for most of the story. The buildup to this was very, very good. Rarely do we get this disturbing of a buildup. It really set this up for the finale perfectly.

The finale itself was fantastic too. It wasn't as good as the rest, but it definitely was creepy. One thing I didn't like was this sentence (it's near the end):

"how did it do that..." - There is no need for it and it breaks the flow of the story. I would consider removing it.

Another thing, you used a lot of ellipses. Far too many. You should look to keep them to a minimum, as they tend to become tiresome.

Other than that, a very solid work. If you fix the issues I pointed out, this will become one of my favourite stories on the wiki. Bravo.