Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26407997-20160506030723/@comment-4715955-20160518090159

Lines like "A decisoin(?!) that would set the course of my life" and your misspelling of "officially" in your comment also show how you're rushing and not proofreading. There are TONS of words and lines like this all over the story. It reads like you're not even in high school yet.

Stop rushing. Focus on the final product, not getting the story on the 'net. Re-read EVERYTHING you write, and re-read it multiple times. Proofread every sentence, every paragraph, every chapter when you finish them, then proofread them all again when you're done writing for the day. Then proofread them again the next day when you start writing again.

Unless you write each draft in one sitting in the submission box, and click submit without bothering to look over your handiwork, like most people who try to submit stuff here. In which case, stop doing that first. At least you have the sense to post it here for feedback and not as a regular upload.

Ultimately, have PATIENCE when you work, and don't make a "scary new creepypasta monster" the focus of your efforts. Focus on telling a good story instead. Writing a story entirely around a creepypasta OC never works, and is always terrible. Honestly I would call this an exercise, chuck it, and learn from it. Start again with something new that isn't about a creepypasta OC.