Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27159479-20151104133655/@comment-27159479-20151110053837

Thanks for the advice Creepy Thomas and 1nnocenteyes. Yes the ending is definitely the weak point and yes 1nnocenteyes the end was kind of rushed (due to the fact that I was running out of time to turn it in and why I was thinking of redoing it before posting it on here.) Your idea of the family being the ones that are killing people is a good idea, but as far as the original story was going it was only members of their family that have been being killed. One idea I started playing around with in rewrite is maybe have the narrator be the one that has been doing it, like he isn't really human or is cursed, and he just wants to get Sarah out of the house before it is time because he doesn't want to kill her. This however I don't know about, right now it seems kind of bleh and I might just scrap the whole thing or go a completely different path. I'm not the greatist writer either, I'm more on the visual artistic side than the verbal.