Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180912183148/@comment-36393004-20180913124234

Ok, I omitted the backstory of his wife. It wasn't really necessary and only served to prop up his alcoholism. I just gave reference to it in a sentence and I guess the reader doesn't really need to know why he drinks. Some people just drink to be drinking. I also omitted the whole dream sequence, it didn't add much to the story and the more I read it the whole thing just seemed like I was repeating myself with the events later. That cut the story down about seven paragraphs.

I added a few sentences, mainly to explain he drinks too much and why he has no help.