Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180411210726/@comment-9041013-20180412091900

Okay okay okay, I know what is your jam. Seriously, I think I've figured out your jam here. You need to go for more mythological/legendary themes with a lot of so called philosophy in them. This, this my friend is probably the best thing I've read by you.

Uhh, while it's not an outstanding poem schematically and technically, it's sound, it's fine, but it's not "Oh my god this is the greatest style of poetry I've ever seen". The themes and the "plot" are brilliant. The ideas you present are often used however, they are always relevant and you've had your spin to it.

It reminded me for a bit of A Little Piece of Heaven by Avenged Sevenfold for a while but then it's switched to a modern day version of Orepheus and Eurydice where a man gets his chance to be with the love of his life once more but ends up making the stupid decision in an attempt to achieve that goal and ends up losing everything, also, props for the Dantesque notion of what happens to those who take their lives.