Talk:Electric Funeral/@comment-7673575-20190703150636

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General Quality - Really can't find any mistakes, save for the dialogue being a wee bit clunky in some places. 24/25

Horror Quality - Really lacking here. Sure, the complete surveilance is creepy s**t, but not in that way. Fear isn't really palpable as it was in the vast majority of other pastas I read. It really feels more like a very strict existance rather than the one of fear. So, unfortunately, I have to lay out a 12/25

Lyrical Interpretation - Unfortunately, I have to bring the pan down here. Other than the almost meta approach to the song itself, the point was missed by half the compass. The song itself is about the nuclear war, extinction, and the aftermath:

To be perfectly honest, a grimdark or a steampunk post-apocalyptic setting would fare much better with this song. This sounds more inspired by Electric Eye by Judas Priest than by anything Sabbath ever made. True, it showcases some fallout near the end, and there are biblical inspirations to the song, but that only somewhat redeems the Orwellian system of the piece. As much as I don't like doing this, it'll have to be a 7/25

Entertainment Value - Was it a fun read? In truth, I'm a bit on a fence here. While the suppressive government dystopias aren't yet done to death (and this was done fairly well), the dissection of a song from (again) a near meta point broke the flow. My mind kept switching left and right to get all the threads, so to be honest, it was slightly tiring. Nevertheless, I did enjoy it, and I couldn't give it less than a solid 19/25

Final Score: 62/100