Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20150306110837/@comment-25941663-20150307091400

I was/am on the fence about Mike's inner monologuing. I am terrible at writing what a character thinks, but I feel that without it Mike has no personality. From what I got from your feedback, Mike actually does have some sort of personality. So, I'm in a dilemma: do I keep the dialogue, or do I throw it away, killing off Mike's character?

About yours and Atonal's confusion: I have no idea what is the purpose of the chairs too. I also don't know what those sitting on the chairs are. I know that they used to be joggers, but I have no idea what they are now. The whole point of those parts is to make the story seem 'off'.

Anyway, thanks for the feedback. It really helped a lot. Maybe I will write a second draft and re-post it on the WW.