Talk:Necrosleep/@comment-26266209-20150401082331

Very well written, and an interesting premise, but Dr. Hail Satan? DCLXVI - 666? Really? That is just dumb and unneccessary. Why mix in the satanic stuff, like the pentagram in the envelope, when the story would have made sense without anything paranormal? The unkown medical practices, the parasite and brain damage was enough to explain everything, satanic symbolism doesn't add anything to the story, it only distracts from it. Why did the case file had to be from 2023? That didn't add anything to the story either, just raised a question that had no real answer. The "police reports" are laughable. This is how I imagine a 12 year old thinks a police report looks like. This is meant as constructive criticism, because honestly, it is one of the best written pasta that is just ruined by unnecessary bullshit, like the easter eggs or the satanism. Less is more.