Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20171214221911/@comment-32764586-20171220175904

RealGlueboy wrote:

All of those gifts were all for her. It was the perfect Christmas day. I get what you are going for, its done well. However it makes me wonder why did Santa kill the parents? Expecially with the last line. Did the parents do something bad? Was the kid unhappy? Why did he kill in the first place? I am not saying that you should spell it out, maybe put some hints in and allude to something. Just due to a single tone shift and murder by itself is not that scary.

Has opportunity, keep at it

Thanks for the replies from both of you. Sorry I have taken a bit to respond but I genuinely have not had the time. When I wrote this I wasn't trying to go for it to be Santa, but rather a guy dressed as Santa with nothing special about him. I could go with it being santa, and maybe then i could hint at Santa discovering the child was abused? Maybe then the motivations would be more clear.