Talk:The Tiny Door on the 2nd Floor/@comment-26936390-20151007173142

Okay, I don't want to be a dick but here's somethings that were a little wrong. In the beginning your in present tense but in the end you move to past tense without much warning. Plus, if you lived in a house and you did the ritual, nad all these creepy girls infite you into the bathroom, your not going to go into there, make the girls drag the reader and force her into the room. It would be nice to if you made the parents get home as the girls drag her into the bathroom and the last thing she sees is her mom lungind for her and crying. Last, the gore fest in the end was cliche and the ghost busters, was way over done. Other than these things the story line was great so keep it up!