Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24859608-20140515161944/@comment-24821182-20140515163418

I think you go into too much detail describing the hotel. The reason I said it would be good to describe the Arctic in great detail is because this particular setting is of great importance to the story, but the hotel only plays a minor role and therefore should not get five lines dedicated to description.

I like the enthusiasm of the narrator, though. I can tell he truly loves the Arctic, and that'll really do something for your story.

I'm going to read as you write, and I might comment on how the story develops.