Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25065159-20150425181513/@comment-25226524-20150425193023

Don't capitalize after quoted dialogue when you identify the speaker/continue the sentence.

Exclaimed angrily Doctor Richtofen - should read - exclaimed Doctor Richtofen, angrily.

Don't use a period to close a quote if you're identifying the speaker afterwards: instead, use a comma.

You have words capitalized that don't need to be: This Is Not A Drill Get Into The Nearest Bunker! - The only word in that sentence that needs capitalized is the first word (there are other instances of incorrect capitalization).

Ok, there are a lot of issues with this story so I'm gonna' stop there. The dialogue is way too unnatural and the story is too chaotic. It needs to be dramatically more developed. I think it would be best if you read the writing advice under the community tab at the top of the page. Also, be sure to look at our Style Guide to get a better grasp on how to punctuate and format your future stories. As it stands, it won't meet our quality standards and is actually a long ways off. I think you need to do some more reading of other stories to get a better idea of what a well developed story should look like. Check out our Suggested Reading for some enjoyable and well written stories. Keep reading and practicing, you'll get better. Good luck.