Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5542146-20181029055238/@comment-9041013-20181030001217

Well it feels like you were jumping from POV to POV a little too much, some people wouldn't be able to keep up with this. Also, try give us some background early on, I guess.

Also, "These people you know, your whole life in fact is a simulation" is kind of well, not scary on it's own? make the ending scene somehow creepier... I don't know, many a bodies speaking at the same time for Oasis, or creepy movements they make or even turn one of the main characters into such a puppet for a moment before giving them back their "free will"

Catch me off guard I guess