User blog comment:SnakeTongue237/A Story in the Writer's Workshop/Uncertainty./@comment-26326346-20160118182435

I'll give Shared Blood Runs Thick a read. If you don't see a review from me in the writer's workshop by the day after tomorrow, then hop on my talk page and message me about it until I do.

I haven't read Detour, but I may later. If you think those things suck about it then I'd recommend starting with the phrasing. A predictable storyline isn't necessarily a bad thing, so long as your goal isn't to twist and misdirect the reader (otherwise it is, because you failed in your goal). As for cliches, a couple won't hurt anything, but you might try to remove a few. Everything is pretty much a cliche at this point, so damned if you don't and damned if you don't.