Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25039222-20140609000114/@comment-24560228-20140609043627

I don't find gore and blood creepy. The blood on the walls was pretty cliché, and the stating that Joe was a regular guy is also somewhat cliché. Let the reader determine who he is through his actions, not by stating it right out there. What kind of crimes did Joe commit? Were they felonies, or were they just minor things? I do like the "witch" part of it, and she wasn't "oh mah gerd a demon! DX" so kudos for that. Sorry if this seems a little disjointed in how it reads, but good job for a first creepypasta! 8 /10. :3