Talk:Nana Razor/@comment-25558572-20140615181958

Sorry it took me so long to get back to you, but I do have a few things to say about this story.

1. The handful of errors don't impede reading and a quick edit can fix them.

2. You did a much better job than typical pastas of detailing the abuse Ally suffered, which actually made it quite sad to read. The fact that it's told from a child's perspectve also helps to make it more unnerving- sometimes a lack of details is better than a long description. (NOTE TO SELF: Keep that in mind.)

3. This is an effectively disturbing story. Not necessarily scary, because it's a little hard to believe, but disturbing nonetheless. I would say that there is honestly little in how it could be improved upon and it's a quite original concept. Thanks for submitting it here, I hope it gets more readers!