Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25157377-20140725054112/@comment-25148755-20140728021721

Love the way you tightened this up. Have a few more comments if you're interested.

Third paragraph: should be "what lay ahead"

Much prefer the dog episode now, old man still feels off. I think the explanation he gives almost reveals a little too much.

Prefer this ending, great picture you found to go with it.