Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26070273-20150410071039/@comment-26070273-20150414080927

ok, ill fix up the commas and try to implement the nightmare more cause looking back, i kinda dropped it... maybe tie the timer into it, make it an omen of sorts, that way the endings more clear...

they fell in the bathroom, onto the toilet (porcelain). if you hit the right spot on your head it could kill you, or send you to a coma or unconsciousness

and they were racing the timer to get dressed, and lost, and it cost them the rest of their time.