Talk:31 Red Riding Drive/@comment-24881871-20140628033133

I liked this. The descriptions are fairly good, and suspense is built at a steady pace. The ending felt empty. A more complete ending might be for the man to have been the werewolf, or perhaps for him to shoot her under the impression that she'd been bitten.

The main problem I encountered when editing it was how you changed tenses quite suddenly; one minute you're speaking as if the events are happening in real time, and the next you're making it seem like this entire story happened in the past. I fixed this by making everything past tense except the final two lines.