Talk:The Canaries/@comment-24040907-20140919060631/@comment-4893169-20140920223922

I tried printing off your really long "dialogue makeover" commentary, but for some reason, it just shows the story. This is very helpful, and I keep envision that Suzie character of yours in a 50's get-up with cat eyed glasses. I'm wondering whether I should go and change the dialogue between the two brothers, but it supposed to be set in the mid 80's and doesn't include any current slang.