Talk:To the Moon/@comment-26054278-20160314212230/@comment-26054278-20160315014906

I think that some expansion on this story or some editing on the first half would greatly improve the story, as most of my problems do lie with the conclusion. If you choose to edit it in the future, I'll give it another look.

Also, sorry for taking so long to get to one of your stories. I should be moving at a quicker pace now, so I should have reviews for your other two stories relatively soon.