Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-12217886-20140607071622/@comment-24821182-20140607135610

I noticed some misspellings and awkward phrasing, "...her house as a warning to warning to anyone..." in the third paragraph is an example. You can find and correct these by doing another proofreading or two, I'm sure.

As for the text itself, I'm not even sure if it's a story. The first half reads like a Wikipedia article, and the second is just the Baba Yaga breaking the fourth wall and threatening the reader. I think the concept of the Baba Yaga sounds really cool, and the creature would serve as a good antagonist. You could put it in a setting, have it stalk children or cause disorder, and reveal its features and history bit by bit as the plot progresses.

I just can't wrap my head around if the current text qualifies as a story, and I hope someone else can answer that question.