Talk:Queen Justine and the Cutest Little Shing/@comment-24996913-20151117195442

I have to say, I'm a big fan of detective/crime stories. Being that I'm a criminal justice and forensic psych major now, I could appreciate not only the interrogation but also the format of the story itself. I don't think you have to change the conversations between Craig Morgan and Drexler at all. The dialogue was steady, and usually when you're innocent, you aren't all over the place, so I appreciate the intelligence and story telling that Craig displayed. I would've found it "strange" if he was erratic and jumpy with his "confession". I also want to take the time to appreciate the pace of this story. That is a skill you have had since the beginning. Most people rush through story telling and details, but you even included small things such as movements. However, during my first read through, I did find the "shing" misplaced. But, I could see why Queen Justine would specifically etch that on Craig to get a rise out of Drexler. So I don't find that to be an issue at all because that word was a power-play. I also want to comment on the conversation between the teenaged daughter and Drexler. That did seem a little outdated for a teenager. But, not all teenagers are created equal, haha. All in all, I loved this story. Keep it up! And I'll get to reading Tobit immediately!