Talk:The Afterlife Can Be an Unusual Place/@comment-35359331-20181023232632

Looks like I'm late to the show, as always, but I brought my notepad with me. So, where to start... on the whole, I rather enjoyed the story. By no means is it scary, but what it lacks on that front it more than makes up for in how unnerving it is. Since I don't have much time to write this review, I'll leave this by saying the story reminds me of the song Pieces, by Machinae Supremacy.

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You're still here? Okay. Well, I lied about not having enough time. In terms of errors, I noticed a few minor issues here and there, but nothing that broke the flow of the story as a whole.

The sentence, "There seems to be no more room for any sort of contemplation beside what I could have done differently." should have a comma right after "contemplation", and "beside" should be changed to either "aside from" or "besides."

I did enjoy how the man took the time to reflect upon his actions, and how you never clarified exactly where the computer came from, or the files on it; despite this, you still established a clear set of rules for Marcus' instance of the afterlife: he was to haunt his former residence on October 31 of every year, contemplating the actions he took during his life during the intervals between each subsequent Halloween.

I am afraid I must leave now, and though this story is more than worthy of receiving a terrible pun in the comments, I must regretfully inform you that the atmosphere created by this piece acts as an adblocker for my jokes.