Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36113436-20180707230013/@comment-35711173-20180708040002

Your most immediate problem is that we can't make sense of it. You need to use paragraphs.

Please read this Blog entry and apply it to your story.

https://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Fatal_Disease/How_to_Start_a_New_Paragraph_Or:_How_I_Learned_to_Not_Make_a_Wall-o-Text