Talk:The Showers/@comment-12186793-20131002021946

Very well written. I feel that maybe the story would have had an even better effect on the reader if Mr. Mays was included at least one more time near the ending; maybe as a concussion induced hallucination telling the protagonist to turn back, or something to that effect. There is also a loose end that wasn't tied up; the silo. I thought that it might have been a good idea to later reveal that the silo was there the entire time, hidden in the bushes near the barn. All in all, it was a very good read. I enjoyed it.