Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5005634-20140731013908/@comment-25558572-20140801012056

Darth LeatherTouche wrote: Removed the ellipses. Sorry if your exprience of reading this was boring. Don't use this idea. Murder for murder's sake has been done so many times that it's transcended from slightly scary all the way to being annoyingly cliche and painfully predictable. This pasta would have been deleted immediately even if it weren't for the huge amount of grammar and punctuation errors (even in the edited version) and the overuse of ellipsis. Here's what you need to do with your next pasta.

1. Read over the Creepy Cliches article on this wiki. This can point you to what saps originality from a story.

2. Make sure you're writing a story for the actual story. You seem to have based this one off a character, judging form the lack of plot and first-person perspective. Start with the story, not with the character.

3. Write your story in Microsoft word. With this, you can catch errors of sentence fragments and punctuation instead of just a spell check. Use ellipsis as little as possible.