Talk:The Case of Tommy Cooper/@comment-36627132-20180926132218/@comment-36393004-20180926134608

'''I will start at your plot issues, because everything above this is minor and you could have fixed it instead of making two paragraphs about it.

Plot issues: '''First off, I really don't think it is necessary to present all of the characters' ages. "It was intially feared that he had been abducted, so search parties and door-to-door searches were conducted" a kidnapper would hide him, it's not like they could just knock on a door and little Tommy would answer. "he may have been the victim of bullying." how would bullying cause him to dissapear? Run away maybe? "But that theory was quickly dispelled, as Tommy's classmates reported that he was well-liked and wasn't a victim of bullying." One of the first things they would probably do is ask his classmates about him. "Suspicion fell on Low's paternal uncle" who's Low? And if Benson Cook is a registered sex offender why was he allowed near Tommy?

This is written much like a police report, that would have their ages. Who cares if the kidnapper would hide him, does that mean they wouldn't attempt to look for him? You answered your own question about bullying, so what's the point of this question? This person just said the first thing they did was ask his classmates, again what was the point of this statement? If he was his paternal uncle it would be likely he would come in contact with him despite his legal status.

Plot Issues 2: "a nude, and limbless human torso was contained. The body parts were identified to be that of Tommy Cooper." Wait who could confirm that? And why? Do they have his DNA to match it with? And how can they confirm he had been sexually assaulted if it was just the torso and not any of his private parts? "It later came up that forensics had misidentified the human torso to be that of Tommy Cooper" Why wasn't this mentioned when you first said it was Tommy's body? And how did they mess up that bad? "The rest of Tommy Cooper's body parts have never been found." The rest? I didn't think they found any!

What do you mean who confirmed it? Again, this is a police record. Why? What do you mean why? Why wouldn't they try to identify the body? Why wouldn't they believe it was Tommy? Ok, it was misidentified means that the original identification was wrong and now they know it isn't Tommy. What's not to get? Cops mess up that bad all the time, you would be surprised. They found his SKULL, if you had read the story.

Note: Your reviews don't have to be so snotty. It's not needed in the slightest bit. That's the "constructive" part of constructive criticism.