Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32864316-20170815172509/@comment-25428589-20180826160824

MarjoleinB, while you've fixed some of the technical issues with your story, a lot of EmpyrealInvective's points above still stand. I'd advise you to go back through his feedback and get a handle on what he's telling you. The ending is still quite rushed, you tell the audience a lot of information rather than showing it to them (I woke up in a forest, it was dark. I was scared), the narrator killing themselves is still very confusing & leaves a plot hole. Emp has given you valuable feedback here which could really help to improve this story, and already covers most of the points that any other reviewer is likely to bring up.