Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140929222804/@comment-25052433-20141002065500

Today, as I was driving downtown to go to work, I saw a homeless man. As always, he was holding a sign. It didn't say "Will Work for Food" though. Instead, writing in small print, was this review.

What got served up good at the soup kitchen:

-AMAZING TWIST! Wow, that twist as the end, magnificent writing. I really didn't catch on during the story itself that the main character was homeless. I mean, I thought it was strange how he would go out and look for food, so I was expecting a vampire for a minute, but a homeless person...well done.

-You pulled off a great literary feat here, the 'after-burn.' This is what I call it when the story keeps going after you are finished reading it. Once the man was revealed to be homeless, everything else suddenly became clear. The disdain that Amy had towards this character, calling the police, trying to remove him from the area, it just all fell into place, after I finished the last sentence. This is always a satisfying experience, and only tends to occur in excellent writing.

In all truth, there is nothing here that I would change. This was perfectly written, and as I said before, that twist at the end set this one apart from the rest. Excellent job.