Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28938497-20150922195005/@comment-27012445-20150924044400

I really liked this story. There was a good mixture of realism and mystery. I got into the story right off the start and you kept me interested until the end. The misspelled words kind of took me out of the story at key moments. Maybe you could add just a tad more build up and description when something is revealed to the mom to add suspense