Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24957984-20140720022756/@comment-24957984-20140722005943

EmpyrealInvective wrote: First thing's first: I enjoy the fact that you posted in both English in Portuguese. (Sadly I only have Spanish and English under my belt so I can't notice if there are any grammatical issues in that part.)

Would you mind if I edited the story a little as I noticed some minor tense/punctuation/wording issues? Just a few I noticed: "Another day begins on (in) Florianopolis.", "Everyone goes upstairs, and enter(s) the dirty discussion room." , "He brings (?) his questions even during sleep.", "“Doctor, we had (have) weird results.", etc.

To be honest there are a few more issues here that could be things that are lost in translation from Portuguese to English. ("I might even be proud of being born on this piece of land and trying to take care of you, but I refuse, with all my efforts, to be your dinner!”). The story is interesting and I would like to see a little more description of the tree.

I enjoy the concept of a carnivorous tree that seeks appeasement/sacrifices (snack-rifices), but am concerned about the translation errors. (If the translation is proving problematic, it might be better to post the story only in Portuguese on the Creepypasta wiki that is in Portuguese or on this site in the AltLang category.) Feel free to fix the translation errors. I never translated a story for real before, so help is appreciated. I don't think it's problematic doing the translation, since there aren't many untranslatable words. I'm also going to add some more description about the tree.