Talk:Voice Messages/@comment-26007602-20151212180242

Alright, so I didn't guess the ending of the story, which is a plus, because you kept me guessing. I thought the wife would be dead, or that Fifer would be evil (and he was, but I didn't expect Jacob to be correct). I've heard of Pickman before (Mostly from coming across him in Fallout 4), but didn't fully understand the reference, but after reading your comment underneath Shawn's, it makes a lot more sense. I like the vague ending of the story, so the reader can decide whether or not Jacob is insane or whether he is actually right. I choose the latter. There was some awkward phrasing throughout the story, and some minor grammatical errors (I fixed those as best I could), but nothing that took me out of the story or hampered my enjoyment.

While I didn't find this story particularly creepy, it did make me think a bit. I've been to multiple therapists and counselors, and never realized how much trust I put in these (somewhat) random people. This story shows an abuse of power, which I think is certainly scarier than the speckled-eyed monsters living around us. Great description and characterization of Fifer throughout the story; he feels believable and real.

I'm sorry I don't have more to say. The plot was a bit slow for my liking, but paced perfectly for the type of story it was. My only suggestion would be to introduce the speckled-people a bit sooner, so that we get a better idea of Jacob's insanity/obsession, while hopefully inducing a bit more build up a bit sooner. Hope this was helpful!