Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33795301-20171204011353/@comment-33795301-20171207055511

Thank you from critiquing my story, especially the time aspect. It's suppose to take place in about a day on the planet. I think part of it is that I called the rocky spires on the islands "mountains". While they are tall they aren't that tall and could be climbed in a day. I'll also add some comments about the changinging time like it being morining at the start and evening at the end. I think I should put in a paragraph descriding the sensation of the new body. I'd also like to bring up the narrator recalling the memories of the swamp ape. About putting the story on a different site; I actually thought about posting to the "wanderer's library". Do you think it would fit there? I personally feel creeped out by melancholly things, hopeless things stuff like that but, if you feel this doesn't fit here I'll consider posting in a more appropriate setting. Oh, one more thing: What do you think of the pillar at the end? Do you think it kinda comes out of nowhere? I mean it's suppose to be unexpected an alien but does it feel a little trown in?