Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31294034-20170530000703/@comment-24101790-20170601190946

I like what I'm reading so far. It has a nice set up and I like the fact that you're putting in some research here with Hurricane Matthew's storm trajectory, OTA signals (although I can't really verify digital signal's inception so that might be a catching point), and the general matter-of-fact method of story-telling so far. I especially enjoyed Emma Kosticzek's letter to the company and her declaration against defective products and communist indoctrination.

My only concern so far is that this has some slight parallels to the Candle Cove series. Both have a puppet show that is only visible to certain people under certain circumstances which may draw unfair comparisons between the stories. As this seems more like the introduction and initial first part of the story, I really can't weigh in more than that as I don't know which direction the story is heading in.

I really didn't come across too many technical issues which is a nice change of pace. The only thing I really notice that I'm not sure is correct or not is the mention of a cold case towards the end. ("After two years of investigation the department closed the case as cold and nothing has come of it to this day.") I don't know if I'm correct in my assumption here, but I thought a cold case was an unsolved crime that is no longer being investigated. I don't know if they declare it as a closed investigation or if they just move on to other cases while hoping for new evidence, forensic procedures, or developments in the investigation. I thought a closed case meant more that the case was resolved and a culprit had been identified. That being said, I may be wrong as I'm a bit behind on police procedure.

All in all, I'll be interested to see what direction this story goes in. I wish I could give a little more help, but I really didn't come across too many issues or things that I felt needed resolution. Best of luck to you in writing this if you decide to continue with the premise.