Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20180515144449/@comment-9041013-20180516085409

Ehh at first I thought it had no real problems, but after thinking about it, seems like this whole thing is kind of off.

First of all, we have effective treatment for Bipolar disorder, people live meaningful, peaceful, none destructive lives with the disorder. So how on earth would you live in a world where cyboring is possible without treatment for mental disorders we're clearly familiar with.

I'm not really sure if the automata are cyborgs or androids made of humans wearing human skin, either way however, considering you almost clearly state that the neural system is synthetic now there simply no way for the lead to be having any BD. No chemical imbalances, no disorder.

I got irked at the point where it is said that the lead's operating system regards pain as unimportant. I call bs, have you ever played Metal Gear Revengence? There's a scene where Raiden (a cyborg) has his operator turn off his pain inhibitors to let loose, said operator isn't happy about it. Y'know why? Too much pain is sensory overload and as Raiden has an enhanced human central neural system it could shut him off, send him into shock or kill him, hypothetically of course. Why am I telling you this? Because if your lead can "feel" pain, it's a defence mechanism. Would the pain of getting half of his torso sawed off be regarded as "meaningless sensory input" as well? probably not.

I am probably just nitpicking here though.

I do agree with Resdraon on the first paragraph, it's kind of over dramatic. You should spell check and re-read the whole thing again from a mechanical standpoint. tsk tsk... Other than that, it's fine and dandy, who doesn't like the ocassional robot apocalypse?! I really like how you ended up showing a very human trait at the end there, also, we humans, given enough time will adept to everything.