Talk:The Booth/@comment-31077845-20170228151522

K, a number of people have read this and either not edited it or had their edits rolled back, but uh...I'll just say it's clear english isn't the author's first language. The word choice and structure was really really odd and jarring, and "shocking to him this was, very much indeed as with great hurry..." was what I was thinking of editing because while edits are supposed to be fairly limited, fixing spelling or changing a word to one the author obviously meant to use, that borders on Yoda speak. Then again like I said the whole thing kinda sounds like trying to read poorly translated english in the instruction manual of a product from China, and I'm debating with myself whether it's even grammatically valid, if you will, to put the subject after the adjective describing it, or if it's just awkward sounding but technically not incorrect. Anyways, for the record it should be "This [subject] was [verb] shocking [adjective] to [preposition] him [pronoun]". That still would sound a little awkward, "This shocked him" would probably be the best form of that sentence, and if we were in an english class I'd probably advise finding a more descriptive word than "This" because that sentence still sounds a little funny, but I'm rambling; at bare minimum it should be "This was shocking to him".

As far as the narrative itself goes it's fairly good; it isn't exactly charting unexplored waters or anything as the strange photobooth that prints out pictures of [insert creepy thing here] and/or possibly causes [insert creepy thing here] idea has definitely been done quite a number of times, but that's largely because it's a fairly effective premise, which bears out here. So basically while the english was grating, the story is solid enough despite leaning on a few cliches.