Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24181913-20150214223244/@comment-25428589-20150214230210

MrDupin wrote: Personally, I kinda liked this. It is funny and you introduce an interesting concept. But it just isn't creepy. As I said, it is more entertaining (intentionally or not) than scary.

I am sorry I cannot give better feedback, it is getting late and I am very tired. This is mostly the reasoning behind the deletion. There was no factor of creepiness to it, the twist was extremely predictable and it was very gimmicky. "Levi" and "evil" actually made me laugh out loud, I would advise cutting that part. Additionally, the ending leaves a lot to be desired. I would take a look at this with regards to that.