Talk:Why Sarah Never Sleeps/@comment-25762696-20141129050112

A few things I loved:

- Sarah doesn't open her eyes. She's smarter than the average Horror movie idiot.

- We don't see what happened to the parents. It is, in my opinion, a universal truth that people's own imaginations can come up with something more horrifying than anything you could put into words. That's why if you do it right, it's a more effective threat to say "or else..." than to say "or I'll [insert extraneously gory explanation of how I would kill you if I actually had the means, here.]"

-The rhyme

A few things I think could be better:

-The rhyme was good, and I'm actually being picky here. The part that talks about "being invited in to bask" is a little meh. But as a poet, I also understand how incredibly hard it is to find a rhyme that still says what you want it to.

Overall, good job! 9.5/10, would show to friends.