Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35522711-20180507234134/@comment-35522711-20180508164032

Resdraon wrote: I don't know why I am. Nor what. I know only that I see them, the Angels. Trapped inside ugly, hideous and deformed beasts that I have named Demons. It is only the small ones, wrapped in bright colors that have them.

I might have pulled a few all nights, but I don't think that's the reason behind the fact I already have no idea what's going on based on the grammar and sentence structure. To clarify, it is the sort of story where you're meant to take bits and pieces of details given and try to flesh them out. For example, the "Angels" in question beat against a "bony prison". Think of it like "What do I have that matches that description"?

Thank you all, you have given great advice so far and I hope to make this story all the better using the advice given.