Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37855860-20181222181108/@comment-24101790-20181222182102

I'm sorry but this is a bit too abstract to effectively convey what point you're looking to accomplish. Couple that with the frequent capitalization ("He Will Leave You For Dead") and grammatical issues ("Time will pass and pay it's (its) toll.") and you have a story that likely wouldn't meet our quality standards.

There really isn't enough plot here to effectively engage audiences in my opinion so it comes off as a bit anemic. This draft is going o need quite a lot more fleshing out if you're looking for a full review. Best of luck with your writing.