Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20180523023011/@comment-25975226-20180523110427

This is totally your own story so take my advice with a grain of salt, you do whatever you want with your own stuff.

I think you're killing it, love the concept. There are a few sections that are a little clumsy however. Your fourth paragraph is a little confusing, perhaps due to all the various relations mentioned like other lover, brother, husband, wife etc. I think you should play around with the wording in this paragraph and make it a little easier to understand.

Also, I think maybe you could change the ending to be a bit scarier if you made it relevant to the outside world. People usually aren't scared of something weird happening in a small town when they're out of harms way. Perhaps the broadcast is still played on occasion, and people can try and find the correct radio station and listen in at their own peril. However, you may want to leave the ending as it is and that's also completely fine :) Good work!