Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20181005100218/@comment-9041013-20181006100124

NoTimeCreepy wrote: Um another good one from Bloody. I hate clowns with a passion, but i enjoyed it. One more thing, please don't ask me to narrate this one. lol 😜 Glad you liked it.

I am not asking anyone to narrate this monstrosity... I'd say it's a little too far...

Kolpik wrote: It's a bit repetitious at times. There might be other examples of this, but lazy me will leave it to you to check it out. 1) I opted to respond by simply asking what is he talking about. “What do you mean, Tommy?”, I responded. 2) As I was about to respond, he typed again but I’ve decided to ask him what it had to do with my dream, “So, what does it have to do with my dream?"

Typo? Being impatient I dragged the stream pointed a little further down its line to a point where my screamed showed a transition slide effect in the video.

I'm not too fond of this story, Bloody, but I see how plenty of people could get into this. I don't have much to say about it other than the few issues I mentioned above. Maybe I'll have more to give on a later draft of this. Good luck, man. I am not huge on it myself, but I wrote it with a certain purpose, and seems like the point came across. Thank you for your help either way, you've helped me notice some other things too that needed a fix. I can always count on good ol' Kolpik :)