Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26473200-20150607162725/@comment-25037895-20150608094837

Ok, early on there's some issues: there's no need to capitalize after a comma unless a proper noun, the second sentence is a run-on, ellipses (...) should be three periods then a space, "wonders" should be "wonder".

Other issues:
 * [anyone else but for me it was daunting to walk]
 * [good to be outside again I hadn't left the house in]
 * [I could have one of there (their) clean]
 * [fists clench as I approach the liquor store a group of young people]
 * [staring at the television. the last couple of] Capitalize "the".
 * [I knew of there would]

The whole story seems like there is missing context, and scattered transitions. The sentences shift from one subject to the next without flowing. Also it just seems kind of random, because nothing really happens except he goes to the store, and notices some people. Also, his family sends him money and family friend shops for him, those parts just kind of seem random. The last paragraph has some spelling issues (tare, tear) (grocery, groceries) (through, threw) (event, even)