Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-33077235-20180922002654/@comment-7064562-20180925035306

To be honest, the story itself is rather horrible and pretty much on the blacklisted boundary line anyway. I honestly find that to be the biggest issue. We need something more interesting, playful in wording, and overall more original.

As I've said, go to barns and noble. Pick up some hunger games, harry potter, maze runner, or pretty much any popular novel, and study the first chapter. They normally even have a starbucks you can sit at while reading! Look at how it's structured, the grammar, the dialog tags, how much dialog and describing is actually used. Then, after you've taken some notes, summarize the major events, learn how to break a story down, what makes it interesting, and why it all fits to complete the first chapter.

All you've really done is remove or add tabs from pargraphs.