Talk:The Lunar Mother/@comment-25706599-20141117182441

I liked the concept and with some edits I feel this could really be a great pasta.

I think instead of just being a 20 something of average intelligence and no future, he should get a brief paragraph of his back story. Maybe he was always interested in being a detective or an investigator, this would really explain the interest in searching for the boy. Right now I could not get the connection, why did he decide to search and no one else did.

Keep up the good work.,