Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28627943-20160602094024/@comment-28607815-20160602154903

I guess I'll be blunt as well, the story as Demuerto said, is very cliché. I wouldn't call it bad so much as predictable. The story seems to be following a checklist. An insane person, check. Doctors and audio logs, check. Escaped and kill said doctors, check. And finally the newspaper excerpt sealed the deal of it being the very epitome of cliché.

I'm sorry if I'm being a bit harsh, as it is your first attempt. But I would love nothing more than to see authors like you improve upon this. I suggest straying of the beaten path and think of something original. Something innovative. Avoid clichés like the plague, and don't make the story seemed forced. The reader can only suspend their disbelief for so long till they start questioning the chains of events they are reading.