Talk:The "I Love You" Murders/@comment-26298997-20190617045257

Some of the wording is a bit awkward. The story itself works for me  but if you're going to say a large city in a particular state I'd just go ahead and name the city. Also it would have worked better in my oinion if told from the perspective of one of the man's children, the man or a victim who escaped and discovered years later what almost happened to them or even the woman in the picture. All that said this exact sort of thing you'd want to tell to friends around a campfire.