Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20190204231042/@comment-35711173-20190205234804

I read it through. It is BIG - most of the way to a Novella. It doesn't feel like a creepypasta to me, more like a straight historical story of that time period. Yes, what is happening is horrible but so was most of history.

Yeah, the insects confused me, unless it was supposed to show like people from the future or aliens from outer space or something. It's like the brass palace at the end. How does it all connect?

I think it should be edited way down, 25% easy. That would quicken the pace and improve the impact.