Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25333848-20140825231639/@comment-25630269-20141107150931

I love how the plot flows for the the 3 chapters. It's well-built and glad to see that there's hardly any "this happen,and then that happened" format and avid readers can easily be attracted to this pasta as the suspense of what is going to happen to the main character can be seen building up through the chapters. Apart from the grammatical errors, your pasta may be a good edition to the wiki and don't be afraid about the flaws you made in the pasta as the writing make readers coming back to you for more. Great attempt so far so keep up !