Talk:What Have You Done, Martha?/@comment-25052433-20140910063857

This was a short one, so I will leave a fairly short review.

-This was a very cut and dry telling of a woman that became overly attached to a sick child, at performed a 'mercy killing'/suicide at the end. While the story was written well, it lacked in a few areas.

-For one thing, you should have spent more time developing the character of Martha. All I know from what I just read here, is that she was a neighbor that the parents trusted. This would have worked better if you'd included something in her past perhaps, that would cause her to develop such a mortal bond with the child.

-My other concern is that this lacked many of the elements that make a Creepypasta. This felt more like a direct telling of tragic events rather than a horror story.

Overall, for what this is, you wrote it very well. I would suggest expanding more in any future stories though. Take your obvious solid writing foundation, and build something amazing.