Talk:The Girl Standing at the End of Church Street/@comment-24218712-20131126222902/@comment-24077689-20131126234042

Enough of the self-deprecation. You seriously have a decent idea on your hands, just mold the clay, as it were. Why don't you rewrite it? Not completely, but start out by reading it out loud to yourself, then edit the areas you think need improvement. If it's something you think sounds cheesy, other people probably will to.