Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5614678-20190722213537/@comment-5614678-20190724181506

@DrBobSmith - Some great noites. Since this *is* an alternate world with lots of alterations to history, including entire fictional states and towns, I think I might explictly change the events of the war in some areas to better fit in with the narrative. I'll also definitely cut out the "two years of training" part because I only initially added that line because I thought it would better fit with the timeline. Now that you point out that bit of history, I think it would be a better to just have him get out there on the battlefield as soon as possible. Maybe the reason the Germans keep him as propaganda tool instead of a weapon is because Stalingrad went a little differently thanks to the help of a certain wonder weapon? Ho ho ho...

The fact that he was a reporter was another nod to golden age Superman, but I think making him a working class mechanic is a really awesome idea, even if it means tinkering parts of the story - I'm fine with that.

Also, I'm actually kind of relieved you only found "dozens" of errors. With how much I suck at proofreading I expected at least a hundred, lol. I'll probably need to recruit some beta readers. Let me know if you're interested.

@BloodySpghetti - Sorry you didn't enjoy the story more. I've read all of those comics you've mentioned, actually. I even read 60 issues of Ennis' Punisher MAX and a good chunk of The Boys. Ennis dark, comically miserable take on superheroes was definitely a big inspiration for this story.

You've brought up something I've been worried about - that this story, while dark, isn't exactly horror. I'm really concerned about that and I'm not sure if I'll ultimately be able to post it here.