Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20141012092019/@comment-25458443-20141013062840

Resident DeVir wrote: EtherBot wrote: What do you think of the presentation? What about the theory is original, and what is cliched specifically? The presentation gives us a good insight as to how the narrator thinks, and since the CP in centered on what happens to him, that's really important.

The theory is original and cliché at the same time, in the sense that it uses the same formula as most Reality and Theory pastas about taking something ordinary and putting a different, supernatural perspective on it. If you scoll through the two categories mentioned above, I guarantee you'll find a number of stories almost exactly like this one.

Your originality comes from the slight deviations from this formula, and how you've managed make the narrator's theory if not logical, then at least coherent - which is more than I can say for certain non sequitur theories I've read on this site. Thanks for the feedback, If you think I could improve the story in any way before I fix those mild errors you mentioned, then please say.