Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29791712-20160807010304/@comment-29015383-20160810120519

second time typing this...for some reason the wiki decided to flip me the bird and didn't post... o__o

I really liked this story. You kept good pacing and kept my attention throughout the whole thing. I like the way in which you described the protagonist's search for answers and methods while still retaining some skepticism about what he finds.

That said I do have a few questions/nitpicks.

You describe that the protagonist finds a lot of methods online about how to achieve astral projections, yet you only mention the ones that led to sleep-paralysis and the Hammock/Rope one. I wouldn't mind reading a few more that he tried and failed with, and perhaps a few that he outright discarded.

"After two weeks of intense practice, I knew I found my own personal and unique way to astral project." < this is also something that raised a question. Is this before or after trying the method that worked for him? The after would make most sense, however the way it is wrtten initially made me think it was before, in which case I was questioning how the protegonist knew this method would work.

Astral projections and ghosts aren't physical. You made that clear at the start with the protagonist's hand going through objects, however both the lady as well as he himself later on were able to handle a very physical knife. How?

If an astral projection's will powers their form, how did the woman stay ahead of the protagonist while possessing his physical body. Even if she is a ghost, his body has very different limits.

How was the lady still able to see and hear the protagnost while possessing him?

If the protagonist was disconnected from his body, how did he feel the pain of the knife as he slit his own throat?

Like I said, these are questions and nitpicks. I really enjoyed the story!