Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26893881-20150801113443/@comment-24248644-20150801145321

First off, the title "The Haunted School" is very generic. It sounds like one of those stories I heard as a child. Try to come up with unique titles such as "Daddy, those people are burning" or "Red handprints"

Second, the story itself is way too short. Maybe you could expand it more by protagonist learning more about what happened in that school and/or decides to explore the ruin, only to run away by supernatural being.