Talk:Native Fields/@comment-25052433-20140825184153

I have the perfect prescription for this disease, let me just take out my pad, and write you a heavy dose of review!

What went right:

-Just about everything. This was a great pasta and very enjoyable to read. It was scary, fast paced, intriguing and left a nice pit in my stomach when it was all said and done.

-You developed the suspense, worked it up to a fever, and then brought on the fear in the closing scene.

-By tapping into the idea of disease and illness, you worked an angle that most readers can, to a degree, relate with. Most of us are afraid of getting sick on some level.

What is diagnosed terminal:

-Really, I can't critique to much on this one, because it was a great story. The only issue I had was with the ending. It felt rushed and didn't tie anything together. We still don't know much about this disease. Why would the doctor be shot? Stuff like that. A story this good, in my opinion, deserved a better ending. Something more definitive that would really reward the reader for taking the journey with the characters.

Other than that though, this was a homerun. Excellent job.