Talk:Transmissions/@comment-991426-20151120034241

Started strong but kind of dropped the [base]ball[ bat] near the end. Did a good job of establishing a feeling of oppression and paranoia throughout right up until we actually get to learn about the monster. Would have been a lot scarier if we never got a real description of it, since it was really vague and we have no idea what it is, what it does, why it does it, or what its presence is supposed to mean.

Not knowing all that, it makes the ending even more confusing, too. For something like Slenderman, appearing in your bed with the door open after you fall asleep is normal. He torments his victims to lull them into dropping their guard. We don't know what this thing is, so we have no idea why it did that. It's implied it can unlock doors, too, so why did it wait so long to go after the protagonist?

Last major question would be how and why the character is posting all this. We can sort of get the implication they're introverted and kind of a shut in, but so little is clearly defined about this person that it's all left up to speculation. And if the power goes out, how are they posting all these updates? I know the monster can apparently bend the laws of reality, but can the narrator, too?

Decent enough story with some flaws that keep it from being truly scary. With some polishing, more entries, and a slower pace, it could be something great. 6/10.