User blog comment:Snappy194/omg why.../@comment-10950063-20140222161831

We have a rule that says you can't write Jeff the Killer stories. If you would have read the rules you would know that.

Your other story can barely be classified as a story.

"Timmy Ran. Timmy ran from it. Timmy ran and ran and ran and ran. Timmy tripped. Timmy fell. Timmy screamed. Timmy vanished..."

To write extremely short stories, you have to be a really good writer. What you write has to be something that doesn't benefit for any extra words. You also have to have a clever idea.

Look at  Bad Dream

Your idea is extremely generic. Someone running from a monster, presumably gets killed by it. The end. This reads like an outline to a story that been told a million times. There's no developments or ending that hits you with anything substantial.

In Bad Dream, you have everything you need. Anything you add to it would be superfluous. It wouldn't make it any better, in fact it would probably negate any impact it has. Yours could only be improved by adding information. There's no tension or atmosphere or anything.