Talk:Click/@comment-26835140-20161105042624

Strange subject and the writing style is good but it takes a little getting used to. I feel that if the reader wasn't thrown into the story they could potentially have made a better connection with the protagonist and understood more of the setting, but the way it happens just kinda leaves the reader there with a bunch of dead characters that they never really cared about. Otherwise, I rate your English at a 7/10 [small repetition and you often used basic-compound sentence structure] creepiness is a 4/10 [you had a nice little spike in events at the end there but that can only get you so far] and an overall 7/10 [wouldn't hurt the story to tack on a little bit more into it, possibly INDIRECTLY expressing the character's feelings IE: "I'm scared" vs. "My heart's in my throat" and also, just slow it down a bit, give a day-by-day narrative of what this guy's going through]