Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26179512-20150308191100/@comment-26054278-20150308191615

I'm sorry to say it, but this is not salvageable at all. Hundreds of grammar and spelling errors plague it down, but even if you fixed them, this story would be incredibly cliche, have quite a few plot holes, and just be a very poor story in general. I recommend proof-reading your next story and trying to make something more original and creative rather than attempting to fix this one.