Talk:Ted/@comment-25326117-20160902014740

1) My father made me stay there and I agreed because my grandfather would want life in his new house since it was barely lived in, it was a short journey from Dublin to Westmeath.   (I think you should have put a space between in and it since you ended a sentence and a space comes after a period).

2) There was three bedrooms,bathroom and a kitchen/living area.  (I don't see there is no space after the period).

3) The clicking stopped and then the footsteps started.  (Isn't footsteps one word?)

4) It's skin was moving and pulsating which released spurts of a liquid on every beat. (What color was the liquid? Was it too dark to see the liquid's color or any defining attributes of it?)

5) It stopped laughing abruptly, bent it's back backwards at an inhuman angle and put it's hands on the floor like a crab. (You might want to put a space after the comma).

6) It crawled up the bed, onto the wall and shot out the window in a flash.  (The comma comes directly after the word and shouldn't be stuck sitting by itself).

7) In scrawled writing it said "Found you, Ted".  (Why isn't Ted highlighted as before in wanted?)

8) I got about two hundred metres until I stopped in front of a massive flood on the road. (I don't think the two in two hundred metres should be capitalized).

9) I had to defend myself and work out a plan to survive "Ted".  (I think Ted should be highlighted).

10) I boarded up the windows and the door and waited for the night to approach and Ted to come with it.   (I don't think up should be capitalized and I highlighted Ted since his name was highlighted in the first part of the story in wanted).

11) It fell dark; I am in the room nearest the door to the house, the first one Ted burst into.  (I think you should combine these two sentences and highlight Ted).

12) I sat in the chair in by the window for hours, the wait killing me which led me to smoke most of my John Player Blue.  (I capitalized the b in Blue since it's part of the name).

13) I had my grandfather's rifle resting on my lap fully loaded, now I waited for the clicking. (I added the apostrophe  or ' in grandfather's since the rifle is his possession, grandfathers is usually seen as more than one person. I also changed the order of now and I since I think it flows more smoothly).

14) It was thick and looked old.  (I added the extra was since I saw no need for it).

15) t was an old farm house cellar which was damp and cold.  (Don't you mean an and not and?)

(Overall, I think the story has potential but it's being held back by too many grammatical errors).