Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27394949-20160119164757

The trees swayed in the wind as the thunderstorm raged on. “Rarity, I'm sorry it didn't go the way you planned.”, a small voice called out to the purple mane colored unicorn. “Oh Sweetie Bell, it's nothing really.”, she replied. She turned to see the pink and light purple mane colored unicorn filly standing behind her. Then someone knocked at the door. “Oh, let me get it.”, Rarity insisted. She opened the door and saw a hooded unicorn standing outside. “Sorry to disturb you. The storm came so suddenly, I was hoping if you would let me… stay the night.”, she spoke softly. Rarity nodded, “Sure you can!”, she told her. The unicorn walked in and took off her hood. Her eyes were a deep red, while her fur was a deep black, like shadows at night, while her mane was as gray as stone. She took off her cloak, revealing her Cutiemark. It was a picture of a shadow. Rarity showed her to the kitchen and across her house. The unicorn’s eyes seemed to gaze off now and then, but Rarity didn't seem to mind. Then she lead her to a bed for her to sleep in. Night came and they were all fast asleep. Or so it seemed. Rarity woke to the sound of hoofsteps outside her room. She got up and opened the door. Seeing nothing, she closed it and went back to bed. The noise came again, this time louder. Grunting, she opened her door and went downstairs. She slipped on something wet and warm, her jaw slamming on the floor. She winced and got up, rubbing her jaw. She used her magic to light the room. The white aura shone and lit up the room, revealing red splotches on the ground. She screamed, falling onto her back. She got up, deciding to follow the splotches. Eventually she reached a door covered in the same wet and warm liquid that was on the floor. She gulped, opening the door. “H-hello? Is anyone t-there?”, her voice shook with fear as she called out into the darkness. Then she thought she heard Sweetie Bell’s scream. “Sweetie Bell! I'm coming!”, she yelled as she dashed down the dark staircase. The screams became louder and more distorted as she continued on. Soon she reached a room that seemed pitch black except for the area that Rarity’s horn lit up. She looked around for Sweetie Bell, hoping to hear the screams again. But it had fell silent. She started to wander around the room, finding bloodstained knives, hack saws, axes, and chains. Her fear started to take over, urging her to run. She refused to leave without Sweetie Bell. Soon she reached a dimly lighted room. Entering, she looked around. Soon she saw a small, blood covered body of a filly lying on the ground. “Sweetie Bell! What ever happened to you?!”, she gasped as she ran to her side. The filly laid lifeless on the ground unmoving. Rarity flipped Sweetie Bell onto her back, but then screamed as to what she saw. An incision had been made along her chest and down to her stomach. Several organs were missing, including the heart. Rarity begun to cry, her tears mixing in with the blood on the floor. Then someone cackled behind her. “Such a shame your sis was the curious one. If she hadn't come down here, she would still be alive.”, the voice said. Rarity whipped around, only to see a black and gray unicorn. “You! You did this!”, she accused, her horn glowing. “You won't be needing that magic anymore.”, the unicorn said as she swiftly darted forward and injected a drug into her horn. “What the- what did you do!?”, she screamed. The unicorn smiled widely. “An experiment with you. You see, I conjured the storm. When I'm through with you, your friends will be next.”. Rarity felt her being lifted in the air and was then laid onto a metal table and strapped down to it. “I will have to remove your horn before we start.”, her voice cackled. The unicorn used her magic a got a hacksaw off the wall. She positioned it against Rarity’s horn, and started cutting through the skin and bone of the horn. Rarity cried out in pure agony, “Stop it! Stop it!”. Blood rolled down her head, dripping into her mouth. She spat it out. Soon, she no longer felt the blade against her horn. She couldn't feel her horn anymore. Then, to her horror, her bloodstained horn fell to the floor. Pain stung like fire in her head, too much for her to bear, causing her to pass out. She woke up, still strapped to the metal table. “This has to be a bad dream. Just close your eyes, and it will be like nothing happened!”, Rarity tried to calm herself. “This isn't a dream, Rarity. You're living a nightmare. One that you will die  from.”, the unicorn’s voice rang out again. The unicorn used her magic and got a scalpel from the wall. Holding above Rarity’s stomach, she cackled again. “Don't worry, this will hurt; a lot!”, then she pressed the blade in Rarity’s skin, right below her ribcage. Rarity cried out in pain. “Stop, please! I'll do anything!”, she said desperately. The unicorn shook her head, “ No.”. She made a long horizontal slice down her stomach, stopping above her pelvis. She mad a vertical slice at the bottom and top of the long horizontal slice she had made. Blood dripped from the wound onto the table, and then the floor. Rarity tried not to look at the wound, that was, until the black unicorn started to cut off one of her organs;  the small intestine.

Rarity felt the knife cut it as she let out a pain strickened scream. She stopped feeling the thin blade when the black unicorn was done cutting out the organ. Then she started cutting out the liver. Rarity’s abdoman burned like fire. “Stop! Please! I beg you!”, she screamed in agony. The black unicorn grinned, “Seeing you in complete agony makes feel like I'm doing a good job.”, she cackled demonically.

Rarity felt her liver being removed from her. Tears rolled down her face. The black unicorn lifted the bloodsoaked knife, then started making and incision on Rarity’s chest. Rarity screamed again, feeling helpless to stop the pain. The same incision was made on her chest. Then the black unicorn opened it up, revealing the heart and lungs. Rarity tried to look away, but she felt too weak to move her head. The knife slashed at her left lung, and more searing pain came. Rarity then found it hard to breath. Then the left lung was removed. Her right lung burned as Rarity struggled to catch her breath. Then the unicorn cutted the right lung out. Rarity couldn't breath at all. Her vision started to fade to black when the unicorn spoke. “Dear me, I, Shadow Storm, have successfully killed Rarity and Sweetiebell!”, then Rarity saw no more.

Shadow Storm let out a joyful laughter as she started to remove the heart. “This has been so much fun until you died.”, she spoke out loud. “I'll find some more ponies to have fun with.”. She thought silently for a moment. Then she smiled devilishly. Rarity's friends would be easy to kill.  