Talk:Here Comes the Child Bride/@comment-25458443-20171009093705

I liked this story inasmuch as it had some really powerful ideas and certain beats were very impactful, and I was a fan of the prose. My problems come with it being almost a bit "shocking for shocking's sake" at times and maybe a bit much. Obviously the reader has to hate the characters as much as Mary does for the story to read the way it does, which is in the end, I think, pretty well, and I think this might be unavoidable for the short story format, but I think the level of sheer evil presented so liberally made the story slightly impossible to believe. There's no buildup to the violence at all, no honeymoon period, and it makes it a little difficult to buy into everyone in the story being this heartless.