Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9967354-20140702062156/@comment-24381191-20140702115033

I think you have written this poem quite well. It expresses the idea as best as a poem can. I think I get the get story. Although I'm not very good at analyzing poems, so bear with me.

I think it's about a tree that has human limbs hanging on it, and the people sacrifice someone to the tree every once in a while(?)

There's a little weird phrasing in this that sounds weird:

The heart beat stop and life-flow bleed

Into the soil. But if I stay, I know that mother won't be pleased.

Fix it, and this'll be a pretty good poem.