Thread:Princess Callie/@comment-24514361-20140224084549/@comment-10950063-20140224124413

Your story is a wall of text. You don't start new paragrapjhs when there's a new speaker. There's a lot of typos, alot of punctuation errors, grammatical errors.

No one is going to contact you about stuff like this before they delete your story. It's your job to know the basic stuff like this.