Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26873355-20151011221408/@comment-26326346-20151012072622

I noticed a couple of grammatical errors, so I'll address those first.

In the second paragraph second sentence, you wrote: "writing down every that's happening to me" you left out the word thing in everything.

Not necessarily a mistake, but the wording comes across as a bit odd. Fourth paragraph from the bottom first sentence, you wrote: "me and my family kind of ruled out that going to an actual school wouldn't be the best idea" I recommend replacing ruled out with decided, because ruled out sounds weird when you have "wouldn't be be the best idea" in the same sentence.

There were a couple of places that I would have put commas in, but I'm not great with commas, so I don't if it would have been the correct placement or not. I recommend on waiting for a couple more reviews before posting this to the main site.

I liked the concept, it would be truly terrifying to not know when you'd go to sleep or wake up next. KLS sounds like it is kind of a preview to death. Interesting read and the diary felt realistic, good job!