Talk:The Tunnel/@comment-4715955-20140310013705

"And never, ever write a creepypasta if you can't keep the narrative or scary elements consistent." If the narrator is writing this in a terrified state of mind, that should be made apparent at the beginning (and not indicated by constantly repeating variants of "oh my fuckin god i'm so fuckin scared right fuckin now"). The maintenance guy being the ghost just comes out of nowhere. You established the tunnel as the central element, so by all rights the story should center around the fabled tunnel, but then the ghost is suddenly able to go wherever and doing whatever it wants. And proofread, proofread, proofread.