Talk:Like a Virus/@comment-24019084-20140425080136

I liked the concept of the monster but the writing could use some work. Feels a little rushed, without much variety in tone or vocabulary, along with some minor spelling and grammar mistakes.

Also one nitpick is that there didn't seem to be any reason for the officer to recognize the missing man's face. If he'd met the man before it wasn't mentioned, and he'd also probably have taken the case more personally. There's also the fact that officers don't respond to distress calls like that solo. There definitely would have been backup involved.

It's not terrible though.