User blog comment:Dorkpool/Creepypasta Riffs: The Jungle Book VHS Cover/@comment-26011836-20150321043650

I remember reading this pasta awhile ago and I remember being very upset by it. At first, I thought I was just being jealous of the detailed descriptions since they sounded better than the ones in the Creepypasta I'm working on. However, I read it again and I realized that it wasn't jealously that made me upset. My main gripes with the pasta is the sometimes confusing writing and the out of nowhere "Child having a bad dream" plotline. I also don't consider this a "Lost Episode" pasta since all it's doing is talking about some screwed up description of the Jungle Book VHS cover. I mean if someone were coming up with these descriptions WHILE viewing The Jungle Book movie, then it would qualify more as a "Lost Episode" pasta and it would make a bit more sense. You know, I don't mind certain pastas that are long and don't cut to the chase right away. However, I won't mind the length or the non straightforward approach if it's used to develop character, build atmosphere and suspense, and/or include elements of foreshadowing. But when this pasta doesn't cut to the chase, it doesn't use this approach to do any of the element building I mentioned. To me, this story uses a non straightforward approach to show off the author's style of writing which gets boring after awhile to be honest. Because of this, the reader ends up losing their patience and reading the pasta feels like a chore. Regarding the new riffing format, it feels like I'm looking at a script for a play. Hmm... Ah ha! I'm looking at a script for DORKPOOL: THE MUSICAL!!!! Featuring such classic songs like: Pretention, The Fetishes of Kaa, Creation Inflation, and many, many more! But in all seriousness though, it may take some time for me to get used to the new "Script" format of your riffs. Speaking of riffs, I need to finish my RapRat riff when I get back to my dad's house! (Big Bill Hell's announcer yells at me): You lazy motherfucker!