Talk:She Won't Stop Screaming/@comment-27624616-20160529232344

Where were this kid's parents in all of this? He goes from 16 to meeting someone he met online to running away with her.

Also, why would this person use the laptop to type the story rather than use it to contact some form of police? Regardless of his guiltiness it'd be pretty clear it would make him that much safer, considering Harley wasn't able to pull down the attic stairs.

I feel like you should elaborate more on her screaming towards the end; she could say far more than just "Luke! Luke!" over and over. This is just my opinion, but I think she should say some sort of message, or something related to the murders, such as; "They didn't escape us, you can't either Luke!"

I have a lot of unanswered questions, and personally I think that's a good thing for a creepypasta. You should see about making this into a series. I think it would definitely be quality over quantity, and I think it would fit.

8/10, wonderful story.