User blog comment:Sodapop And Adrenaline/Hello all!/@comment-24101790-20160115033243

A little clue to start with that was posted (which you responded to) ten minutes before uploading the story without any changes. "This story isn't bad, it needs a good deal of work, but it isn't bad. I think the biggest thing that bothered me was the flow of the story, the sentences were kind of choppy. I say this because you can make the sentences flow smoother, have them be a little more complex. As it is you have your story set up like: I say a man walking down the street. (Stop) He was wearing a red suit. (Stop) Each time he took a stop his shoes squeaked, it was funny."

Usually a message like that does not indicate everything is good to go and should be posted immediately after receiving that comment.

Combine that with the punctuation, capitalization, grammatical and story issues and you have a story waiting to be deleted.