Talk:Shoe Box/@comment-15777822-20140410222703

This is an interesting premise, and I'd love to have seen it explored a little more. Describe the strange relief the character feels once he or she is seperated from the box. Include more dialogue with the parents so we feel for them when they're killed. That sort of thing would really improve this pasta. Otherwise, it's a really good read!

Want to look at one of mine? x