Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33077235-20181121055529/@comment-33696343-20181121133448

BloodySpghetti wrote: Well at first it didn't feel much like a troll pasta even with all the bad english and weird formating. Then came "a conviniently placed metal rod" that made me really suspect this being a joke more than anything.

The English is terrible, you have to start a new paragraph whenever a new person speaks. The plot is silly, follows a bad structure of someone coming across something awful, and then by chance of plot powers getting involved without wanting to be.

The whole idea of a ghost radio show that encourages people to murder is silly... because the spike in murders would kill the operation soon enough. Having a fan base means they are there for a while, which is unlikely, also someone might snitch... as was the case with Armin Meiwes who one time managed to get a willing victim to be cannibalized through an internet add, and the second time was reported to authorities in Germany.

Also, seeing a woman with a knife when you have a weapon and you're an adult dude... yeee... not so scary...

Also engaging the audience in such a terrible storyline as if it were real wouldn't make people believe you, it's just not a good work of fiction and we've probably read a few similar to this.. Oh yeah man, thanks for the criticism on my story.