Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26414924-20150519152244/@comment-24450775-20150519165719

Kudos for trying to write a found footage story. Those can be especially hard. Mostly this is well written, with a few issues of tense, "I thought my hearts going to explode" should be something like "I thought my heart would explode"

I am mixed over the ending. I didn't expect it or anything, but having the narrator refer to his user name on the site as a different person feels like a narrative cheat. I get the misdirection, but I don't care for the execution. Don't get me wrong, there are good things here, but also things I didn't care for. So I am mixed overall.