Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26227439-20150330102607/@comment-24101790-20150330134223

I'm sorry but this comes nowhere near our quality standards. It has numerous capitalization (names need to be capitalized, words are capitalized in the middle of sentences, dialogue needs to begin with a capitalized letter), punctuation (possessive words are missing apostrophes, commas are missing where needed) spelling, wording (you shift from present tense to past tense multiple times, broken english "what your name", redundancies), dialogue needs to be spaced out, and spacing issues.

Additionally the story seems like a JtK copy. Starting with the newspaper article, the bully/abusive dad, etc.

Finally the story violates the no-spinoff rules by featuring Slenderman at the end. To be honest, even if you did fix up the issues, remove the slender man references, and distanced the story from JtK; your story would still have issues as it comes off more as a vehicle for "The Darkness" than an attempt to make a scary story. (For example: why does Rick start saying he is "the darkness"? There really seems to be no explanation other than it was something that the author thought was a cool name.)

I'm sorry if this comes off as harsh, but we receive these stories on a daily basis and they are almost always below quality standards.