Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25024572-20170607141552/@comment-24101790-20170616001019

A funny little tangent on the story. To be frank, I enjoyed the NES Godzilla Creepypasta until it got to the point with Melisa. It just felt like the author kept trying to ramp up the tension and had hit a bit of a wall in the middle so he just tried to throw something in to make it more dramatic. Melisa isn't even really mentioned until like the fifth or sixth chapter so it does feel a bit random (oh, by the way, I had a girlfriend who died in front of me after some kind of mental breakdown, let's not dwell too much on this as I continue to recount this story about how my dead girlfriend saved me from death.)

I won't say I hated the series as I really liked their inclusion of pictures to really build-up the realism, I just felt like that section was shoe-horned into the story. I liked the direction you took as it's definitely got the teenage mindset dripping all over it. If I was going to add anything onto it, I'd probably include either Red or the questions face just for their reaction to the awkward ex-couple fight. Good stuff.