Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190518193428/@comment-9041013-20190519173340

So you've mostly solved the cautiousness plot hole from the previous draft but completely exposed Shelter by making him the narrator. I mean, he could be a narrator but you'd have to be very weary of not exposing him as a killer. Make him legitimately feel like a person who cares. Perhaps build the boy to appear more like the bad guy about to pop out and do something bad but you went the route of "Im the killer and Im gonna let everybody know"

It's not very exciting.