Talk:Happy Halloween/@comment-24281984-20141117171523

Didn't enjoy this one very much. The writing was decent and had only a few errors, which I corrected, although you were quite heavy on the ellipses in the beginning. The frequent cursing also didn't help as it seemed more like a lazy way of expressing disgust than anything else.

There seemed to be no good reason for the MC to kill people as well. Without that, this really isn't much of a story to begin with; the plot is barely there and there is no time for character development, just basically a drawn-out killing scene. Aside from the cursing it is decently well-written, but its unoriginality and overall weakness are what stop me from enjoying it very much.