Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24821182-20140520130632/@comment-24304936-20140520143537

Very cool.

I like the build-up on Andy's story. I even chuckled when the math teacher agreed that math was useless. You were able to make me despise Andy, and in the end the heathen got exactly what he deserved. I like the mundanity and violent randomness of where he wound up.

I think the dark elf should've been more careful with his words when enticing Andy, however. If Lioneir would have tried that line on someone familiar with Forgotten Realms lore, he might've failed in his endeavors since the dark elves live underground and hate humans.

Aside from some minor grammatical issues that I noticed, this was a cool read. Can't see why it shouldn't be on the main site.