Talk:The Last Freedom They Gave Us/@comment-25771007-20160730191636

Ugh, this was so badly written. To be honest, I hated reading it. The story, sure, it could belong on this wiki. But starting it with an unfinished sentence that turned out to be your first attempt to write the beginning and then continuing with a perfected version of that sentence is horrible. Then several spelling errors, accompanied by terrible punctuation. Forgotten words, switching between writing numbers in letters or numerals (you should always write in letters! Only exceptions are large numbers and dates), using bold letters for insistance (common rookie mistake that you usually learn not to make in middle school), bad narration, etc etc.

Overall rating, 2.5/10