Talk:The Cats of Juniper Valley/@comment-25170312-20160627024438

Pretty good. The writing is kind of all over the place, and ultimately it's not that original an idea, but the way the story is told is what makes it interesting. I was let down in the end, though. Especially with how you spoon feed the reader in the final section. To the character it's only conjecture, but as the reader it seems like you're telling us exactly what happened.

Also, the entire first half of the story doesn't have much impact on the second half. I get that it's character development, but so much of it is inconsequential. We need to know the relationship between the characters and that Jane has lots of cats and that's about it. There's not really any foreshadowing of character motivations that would make it all necessary. I believe too much time was spent getting to the meat of the story.

The swears also felt completely out of place. Just my two cents.