Talk:The Coffin Maker/@comment-34162330-20190121004215

this was an interesting story, but there are a few issues that i think you should know about so you can make an even better story next time. first and foremost, there are too many unnecessary details. a lot of the backstory interjected into the story randomly, like the entire paragraph about his family's jobs, distract from what's actually going on, and feel like filler. it would be a better, more fluid read without these details. other than that, the writing is done well, and the plot flows naturally.

8/10 overall