Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26519812-20150622015543/@comment-25037895-20150622022803

(but he would not come to be called “The Reader” by talking on a forum.) I'm not sure your meaning here is clear, how would talking on a forum affect his being called "The Reader"? Is he known on the message board for silence?

This storyline works for me, the ending isn't perfect, but it works. The beast that shows up at the end could be described a bit more. It's a bit of uncertain ending, but the build-up for it (Were his friends wrong?) and was what made it work. The description before the bank segment is a little broad and seems like a rant. It would be improved by cutting it down a bit. This is a pretty good plotline IMO.