Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20200210110646/@comment-45046266-20200214021815

I don’t claim to be a critic, so take my words with a grain of salt, but I am taking College Composition at my local community college. In class we have been discussing how vivid imagery lends itself well to writing. In order to come up with it, one can’t simply describe something, but they must visualize it for oneself is their mind, with all the seemingly needless details right down to smells and tastes. Perhaps you could use such imagery to help create more fear. How horrible is the storm? What do the clouds look like, besides gray? How does the thunder clap? How hard is the rain falling? Like molten lead? How cold is the frozen sun? As cold as another celestial body? A more personal suggestion based on my recent readings of certain weird fiction (So grab a heaping pinch of salt.) is to hint at or elaborate on the implications of what’s happening to the child. Why must the cloud shield the child from the sun? What would happen if it didn’t? Why is the frozen sun so cold and alone? What could make a sun feel this way? Are there forces at work greater than even celestial bodies. I know this is late but nonetheless I hope that this helps. –Harrison