Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25477067-20150108181105/@comment-25941663-20150110143747

Up until halfway through it was pretty good. But after the protagonist saw her dead neighbor, it became a bit dissappointing. Her reaction wasn't normal. Every sane person would be too scared to try and fight back. After she bought a gun, any creepiness left in the story was evaporated.

Also, I don't really understand why you put 'Archive Entry' at the top and something similar at the end. What does it mean?

To synopsize, you introduced the story excellently, but the second part was a missed opportunity. If you manage to come up with a better second half, this will be a very good story.