Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26981815-20160126064453/@comment-26981815-20160128101149

Mikemacdee wrote:

Unholy Lord wrote: I'm really sorry I'm asking for your help, but I heard you are one of the best writers in this Wiki. Can't you try and sort of 'save' my story? lol I dunno how true that claim is, but really the best I can do is point out what can be fixed. Fortunately this is a wiki, and if you add an author's note at the beginning of the story about English being your second language, and requesting help with fixing it up, anyone who comes by can pitch in. You can try leaving EmpyrealInvective a message on his talk page (make sure to format it correctly), explain the language thing, and ask him to remove the "marked for review" tag so readers can help you fix the narration. He might be willing to leave it up a bit longer. Otherwise you should be able to find some critique groups online that can find time to help out in exchange for feedback on their own work.

An easy fix for the tape recorder thing would be to have it take place during the late 1980s or mid-1990s, when portable recorders were common. Otherwise there's bound to be some modern portable voice recorders, or smartphone apps, that you can research. It must be quite accurate, because it was actually an admin who made that claim (LOLSKELETONS). Anyways, as I said I can't look into editing today, but as my pasta is risking being deleted I'll try to message EmpyrealInvective right now.

I could try changing the time in it, it's a good idea. Do you think anything else present in the story might not have been at that time? If not, I'll definitely do it.

Thanks!