Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27726836-20160315161839/@comment-24101790-20160315163209

I'm sorry, but this is well below quality standards as well as unfinished. Looking at the basic grammar: it's=it is, its=possession, you forget to put apostrophes in contractions (We're), you need to use commas when there are natural pauses/breaks in sentences ("Were about to land its about time you got up!"), you have spelling errors ("we ammediately rushed", "you cook tommarow.", etc), You also need to capitalize properly ("As i was running i knocked down a boy", "you cook tomorrow." She (she) replied.")

As for the story, it feels pretty rushed and the idea that they would build a mall over a lab that was destroyed in an attack seems unlikely. Additionally, you really need to break up to the story as having everything condensed into one paragraph is not a good approach. As the story isn't complete, I can't really focus on the story, but I will say, if it were uploaded in its current form, it would likely be deleted.