Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27080023-20151015114153/@comment-25148755-20151116225401

Think you got most of it. There are a few minor things I noticed but it'll be easier go in and fix them myself once you have posted. Since Jay already approved you, you should be good to reupload. You mention this as the "first" of these otherworldly incidents. Hope we get to see the continuation in the future. FYI I thought the first reveal of monster Evangeline worked very nicely. The line starting "as the gloom closed in on her" actually gave me a bit of a chill. Well done!