Talk:Jeff the Killer/@comment-7694373-20140505022856/@comment-7694373-20140508234618

Prove it. Oh, and after some thought, I hereby change my original score from 6.5 to 3.5. This story only gets worse the more I read it. Another thing I heard is that bleach doesn't permanently whiten your skin. It will revert back to normal within a day. I also think the reason I get a slight case of the heebie-jeebies out of instinct. It's supposed to be scary, so I naturally feel scared. Also, I think this story was written by a 12-year-old without a strong concept of how the world works and took inspiration from movies and TV.

"He grabs Randy and pile drives him into the ground." It seems like someone likes WWE!

"Well, well, well. It looks like we got some new meat." That's probably the most cliche thing a cliche bully can say.

"A thing of bleach" Wow, the writer has a SUPER extensive vocabulary.

"As he fell, he puked all over." All over what? Jeff? Himself? The sidewalk? The writer was not specific enough.

"He gets on top of him and punches him straight in the heart. The punch causes Randy's heart to stop. Jeff hammers down on him. Punch after punch, blood gushes from Randy's body, until he takes one final breath, and dies." Umm, what? If Randy were to actually die from that, Jeff would've been sent to jail after he got out of the hospital.

It's clear that the writer barely made an effort to make this seem realistic at all.