Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24859608-20140508204501/@comment-24859608-20140509163253

Fatal Disease wrote: Again with the grammar issues. You misued "your" as "you're" in your sentence.

Overall, I'd say that this was pretty decent. I kind of feel like that this has a vibe of Inception in it. The outcomes got a little bit weird towards it. Because people have different fears (like mine with loosing someone that you truly love in life).

Although, I do say that this was a decent reality article. Just change up on some of the stuff, like grammar issues, misusage of words, ect. I noticed a weird usage of commas "That was the whole purpose of the test, normally, it would try to attack you.", so I think I will go through a grammar check and spell check, then proofread it.