Talk:Fear of Victory/@comment-25000365-20141010040759

No offense, but this one was kind of bad. First off, you don't have to put spaces BEFORE colons and commas. Also, this is riddled with typical Creepypasta lost episode cliches and the overall tone seems a little childish. Also, excessive and gratuitous blood and gore don't have to be included to make a scary story. You should also know that lost episode pastas are now not allowed. Sorry if I came across mean, but it's just my opinion. 2/10