Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24651624-20150501042417/@comment-24651624-20150501202525

Just a few things. I probably sound real pestery right now but I really want to post this story because I had fun writing it.

If I make the opening long, prolong the suspence and build up the very end would it help? I promise to explain what I meant about the egyptian thing the best I cna as well so people arne't wondering what that was about.

Do you think if I do this and of course add more to the story does it have some kind of potential?