Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20150521160433/@comment-26030957-20150528163750

So, to answer your question, is this scary enough? Well, I don't think it is very scary in and of itself. But, I believe it is a great introduction to things that are going to get very scary. The reason it is not scary is because, though the narrator is nervous,  there is no real feeling that something is going to happen right away. But that is fine and this is great: it is creepy and building up a feeling of tension and dread that I'm sure you will later unleash on the reader.

Epistolary fiction can be difficult to make really scary because the narrator is obviously going to make it out of the situation to go write it.

So, while this wasn't terrifying, this journal entry did an excellent job of providing back story and building tension.

I know this is a rough draft but I just want to point out that this sentence is a bit awkward: "I didn’t anyone resembling that description go by nor did I smelt any strong disagreeable odor.”

Smelt is the process of extracting metal from ore not something to do with the olfactory senses.

Also you wreak havoc not wreck it, trust me I know, for I wreak havoc all the time. lol