Talk:Mr. Bones/@comment-24077689-20131120035150/@comment-5927167-20131120214019

Currently working on expanding the story to give more of a background; hopefully it won't become overdone.

I stopped where I did because I thought of stories like Candle Cove, where there's the reveal and then an abrupt dropoff. I am well aware that I did not do the same thing here.

Thanks for the feedback about the ellipses. Fixed them. I had seen the technique used to denote a long pause and thought it would work here. You're right though, now it seems less melodramatic and flows better.