Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25078895-20140619170012/@comment-25076176-20140620211238

I like the part of the paintings its interesting, it gives life to your character. It would be more intriguing if the setting of the torture wasn't in the basement. But Jake was a relatable teenager and the foreshadowing really gets to you. A comment on the mother would be that in her first statement she sounds more like a sister, rather than a mother. Maybe one or two grammatical mistakes but overall its eye-catching.