Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25174721-20150724195100

I was correcting my story, when i published it, and somehow it confliced whit an edit by another person. I really need feedback. I created a creepypasta called the dark web, which describes the deep web, and tell an extra story about it! Here it is, (This is the unedited 1.0 version, the 2.0 got conflicted, resorting in an error edit, which resorted in actually not changing my story, but leaving every little grammar issue i corrected deleted, and it also turned it into a massive text wall)

Oh yes... The Dark Web, The Deep Web, The Shadow Web, The Hidden Web.

Whatever you wanna call that abomination to humanity.

If you are not familiar whit this disgrace, ill tell you everything you have to know.

The deep web is a place that you cannot access whit your standard search engines like Google, Yahoo or Bing

It is aboout 550x times larger than the surface web, and it is full of darkness.

The deep web holds about 7500 TB of information. Now you would think that that is epic right?

Well think about it for a second, why do you think it is hidden?

If you haven't guessed, ill tell you what the deep web is purely made out of.

Its full whit hackers, pedophiles, illegal porn, hitman, torture sites, twisted crazy people, illegal guns,

drugs, scammers, counterfeit money, fake passports, fake driver lisences and more that i just can't mention...

You can access this nightmare realm by using tor, the onion router, though i highly recommend avoiding this

for your own good. As i said, its full of the people that god made by mistake.

They can track you down, these hackers are sick, and they can track your IP down in seconds.

You can stay on anonymus mode, to avoid this, but advanced hackers can get through that like child's play.

These hackers can do such things to your computer, that even myself don't want to mention.

Don't belive me? Well okay then, go to TOR, find a mirror to the hidden wiki, which is a site of mirrors

that show lots of websites, and also has a counterpart known as the uncensored hidden wiki, which is

purely illegal bullshit, and eat your heart out with them.

You will temporarily go insane in less then 1 hour searching this mistake of god.

There are numerous stories of creepy encounters and they are mainly about seeing things that no man should see.

Some say "Nothing shocks you like a bullet hole", but this proves that that is false.

You can find cannibal, pedophile, hacker, and psycho chat rooms, and their stories.

Mainly the most disturbing ones are usually the pedophile and the torturer ones.

They will tell you how they raped a child and either killed it or passed it to another sick asshole,

or they will tell you about their horrible torture experiments.

I will admit right here, right now, i couldn't search this wicked place for 30 minutes, and this is a true story.

When i started searching this place, i actually knew what the people here were capable of.

I was shaking in fear, even when i was at the search engine. I couldn't even put my internet window to fullscreen,

Because that is just another way of lending personal info, since they can check your monitor size with that.

I only found a couple of porn sites, nothing else, and i am still glad i didn't.

I can't imagine what would have happened if i found a hacker, or a psycho.

I feared this place extremly, and i am still glad i did.

I know this sounds like i am exaggerating, but let me tell you some even more bizzare things.

As i said, i didn't mention alot of things about this horrible place. Well what if i told you that there were

organ dealers in there? They capture humans, usually homeless, and sometimes torture or experiment

on the human, before they kill, and take out their organs.

But if you want more whitout actually going to the deep web, just go to Reddit, or Google it.

You will find numerous stories, and they are guarantee to haunt you.

The deep web usually uses bit coins, for currency, though you can find deals whit other types of money.

There are some actual valid websites, that are not scammers, and get your illegal goods for the right price.

There is also a hiddan lair of the deep web called "Mariana's Web" which is said to contain all human

knowledge, though noone actually could access it over the years. Some think that Mariana's Web is a

super AI, which controlls the whole internet. It is theorized that to reach this, you must use

Polymetric Falcighol Derivation, and a Quantum computers, which actually do not exist yet.

But this lair is only rumored to exits, and to our luck, it is most likely an internet hoax.

And now, i will stop warning you, and tell my story.

As i said, i never went "deep on the web".

The worst thing i found was a besitality site, which i think you can find on the normal net too, im not sure

im not into that sort of stuff.

However my friend found something diffrent.

I told him about the deep web, which was a big mistake.

I told him that you could only access it by TOR, and you should always go anonymus.

I also told him that he shouldn't do it, but he was always stubborn.

2 days later i got a Skype call from him. But this time it was weird.

We usually spoke on microphones, and used no webcam, but this time he did.

When i saw that he activated his, i turned mine on aswell.

I was suprised when i saw him. He was pale.

I asked if anything is wrong.

Then he told me everything.

Of course he couldn't resist exploring the deep web, and it was not a big suprise.

He has found The Hidden Wiki, and blindly went into the uncensored counterpart.

He then browsed through the contents. He went through like 7 mirror websites before he found one called "KKKPCP325257896DEAF".

He quickly guessed that it was an illegal one, beacuse of the name, obviusly to make it harder to get to it.

The website was white, and had 2 buttons: Exit and Enter.

He obviusly clicked enter. Man.. I wish he hadn't.

What was on the website shocked him.

There were pictures of people tied up.

They were mainly under age.

But belive it or not, that was not the most shocking part.

They had 3 lines of text under them. Under one of the younger girls picture it said:

1 day: 100 dollars.

1 week: 500 dollars.

permanent: 5000 dollars.

They were selling people.

Obviusly, if you bought one for 1 day/week, it was for sexual purposes.

But if you bought them forever, you could do anything whit them. And i meant anything.

At this point my friend was shaking. But his heart dropped when he scrolled up, and saw the catalog of their merchandise.

It was: Humans-Organs-Drugs-Weapons

The drug-weapon part did not creep him out, the organ part did, but not when he saw the category "organ", instead when he clicked on it,

And saw pictures of people tied up, next to the pictures, there were pricings of their organs.

What was the most shocking is how many people were there. He counted them. There were 242.

He could start to feel the insanity take over.

He had enough of this. He tried to close the page, when a textbox appeared.

It had his continent, country, city, street and adress on it.

When he closed the text box, another one instantly apeared.

"You are next"

He then realized, that half of the people that were there, tied up, were ones that visited the page.

The time that they were spending looking at these poor people was more than enough for the hackers of the site to get their IP.

It has passed 4 days since the Skype call.

He is gone.

Noone has heard of him, but i know what happened.

But i said too much already, and i made a mistake when i revealed TOR, and a bigger by mentioning Mariana's Web.

I want to ask a favor from all the people that are reading this.

NEVER GO TO THE DEEP WEB!

There were story corrections as well as grammar corrections, and stuff that would make it more than enough to fit the Quality Standards!

I would be really thankfull if i got feedback :/ 