Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26581765-20150707055637/@comment-26007602-20150707064515

You should read [creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Creepypasta_Wiki:Writing_Advice/Why_Your_OC_Got_Your_Story_Deleted this] before you continue revising your story. Your story follows the tried and true "Jeff the Killer tropes" that many, many other stories fall into. Normal kid is bullied/abused by some unnecessarily cruel person, snaps, and then kills someone/everyone. It's been done before so many times and is hardly ever original. Your story lacks content in favor of introducing your OC. You need to address the cliches before you revise the story, as they will drag the story down and keep it from being accepted here.

Some additional notes: while I didn't notice any grammatical errors (which is a big plus), you need to be in source mode when you edit so the formatting isn't what you have here. Let the default settings be; don't indent paragraphs, don't italicizes the entire story.