Talk:31/@comment-25428589-20181002181329

This really sounds like a challenge, I'm excited to see what else you come up with.

The first entry was enjoyable, the use of light to slowly reveal the monster's progress was novel, and your writing style is very effective. There was one small bit of awkward phrasing I couldn't work out how to correct - "His heart didn’t settle for he had seen nothing". Perhaps it's just a turn of phrase I haven't encountered before, but it just doesn't read right to me. It could be changed to, "His heart didn’t settle for having seen nothing"? I didn't want to change your wording here, since I wasn't sure if I was just reading it wrong.

Best of luck with the upcoming stories!