Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24774864-20140404173503/@comment-24101790-20140405023813

I was enjoying the story so far. You definitely do a good job proof-reading your story. (I only spotted one or two errors in the whole story.) If you decide to finish this story, I only have a few recommendations.

The first being to make sure you create tension, but don't ramp it up too quickly. (i.e. don't have the raincoat man suddenly appear in your room.) You have a good pace set for your story.

2nd: In later encounters with the raincoat man, he could use a little more descriptors (Especially if the protagonist goes outside to confront him.) What does he look like? (facial features, atmosphere, how he speaks, [if he speaks.] et al.)

Interested in seeing how your story pans out.