Talk:The Smith Mystery/@comment-25975226-20150204060533

It's a very well written story. Just a couple of things.

"the only security footage of the deaths is just the a dark coloured red" - drop the 'the' or the 'a' in this sentence before 'dark'.

Also, when he said NO VOWS! Did you mean vowels? Like as in a, e, i ,o and u? Because you might want to change it to vowels if that was the case.

I don't get the encrypted message. Is that meant to be words with the vowels taken out? Is it 'secret institute of something or rather'? I didn't get it, but I guess it will make sense to other people. Over all, really well written, short and sweet, makes you think. All great qualities of a story. 8/10 :)