Talk:Pornography Game/@comment-25941663-20150217113916/@comment-30868798-20161227191520

What is the metric of an acceptable level of realism to make a story "good"? Is a talking raven just perfect?

The problem in your criticism is treating the events of the story with common logic that can be somehow infulenced. Theorycrafting what the protagonist SHOULD have done and how easy it would have been to do, or how the things in the story could not have happened and what should have happened is useless in terms of analysing the story. You're writing fanfiction. Instead, look at what actually happened and think why.

What does it tell of the protagonist that he insists on watching the films to the end? Why does he assume (and at the same time, makes the reader assume) that the vandalism has been done by the teenagers?

Your insistence that the protagonist acts illogically, yet allowing the men in suits and a mysterious traumatic event with no direct explanation, tells that the issue is more about your preference on how people should act and what should happen in stories for them to be good and "logical", rather than a problem with the story itself.