Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-1186783-20141229015738/@comment-25170312-20141231043839

Hmm, well, that's how I imagined it being told, so maybe you have a point. Though, I don't know if every reader is going to pick up on that. Maybe at the beginning you could allude to who is narrating. I definitely got the feeling that the narrator was similar to how you described, so it might not be necessary. And maybe it's not a big deal to move between two different types of past tense, as long as it's not a mix of past, present, and future. I think if you are happy with it then it's fine.