Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181020224417/@comment-9041013-20181020235429

The story progresses... but isn't it kind of weird you just let us know about Jan's past out of the interview sessions too?

The Nameless messed up Mike pretty good... What happened to them next? Find out on the next episode of DBZ!

Okay in all seriousness... It's, ugh... I don't know, it's just this thing about the randomality of the past perspective which seemed weird to me. The rest seems proper and in place. (Aside from the hospital doing nothing to try and fix people's problems... I mean... they just let Pabs be delluded by whatever...)



Oh, how about not making the clear connection between The Wyrm and The Nameless... like have Mike blurt out "I saw that... that slug thing...and it's far worse than you are..." something along those lines. It's like seeing the Wyrm had  less affect on him than the Nameless and it's obvious that he is far less than the beast.