Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25220627-20140729201919/@comment-25241328-20140730000205

great concept involved in this... i give you Kutos for originality as well, but... there are many problems in this.... there are many blank holes that really dont describe "EVERYTHING" and give this story real "UMPTH" this story isnt scary in a sense, as i read it i was asking myself "when will it end?" dont make stories like that its a good concept just write it better thats the only fair way to put it.