Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25949604-20150330021622/@comment-26259535-20150330210900

Try not to make it a block of writing as they tend to make the story uninteresting and a drag. Try separating the part that says 'Anyways back to what happened' or 'when they got back' and maybe even 'it was called' if needed. Also, I found a spelling error in your writing: daily dose That's the only one I found so don't feel discouraged.

Overall, it is an amazing idea, and you have improved it vastly from Alex's review. I would rate it 8/10 in it's current state. Keep up the good work. ;)