Talk:The Snag/@comment-26975470-20150914074938

I was rather interested in the story up until the end. I think it you would maybe add more off a twist instead of, "Whoops, I'm dead" it'd be good. I did read the comment though were it said you got the story from a dream but sometimes it's okay to twist and contort your story so it's more delectable for the reader. With some work this could be a great story.