Talk:If You Hear Sleigh Bells/@comment-26475800-20161228021942

Okay, so let's get into this story. The concept, while not the most original, was rather well executed. Your grammar was good enough to get you all the points for that, and the story flowed nicely as well. I'm really glad that you didn't kill off the narrator, it seemed like you were going to at the end, but thankfully you didn't.

Problems with this story: There really wasn't much to it. I would have liked to have read a little more and would have liked to have gotten to know the protagonist a little more. Also, Santa/the monster, while described well, didn't really do much for me. He was there, he found the girl and choked her out, but there wasn't much of a conflict or resolution. It fell flat at the end.

So Scoring:

Grammar: 20 points.

Use of Prompt: 20 Points. You used that prompt perfectly to tell a story.

Creativity: 13 points. I would have liked to see a little more imagination and the lack of conflict/resolution hurt you in this area.

Flow/structure: 15 points: It flowed nicely, but I was left wanting more. The world could have been developed more.

Overall Story: 13 points. It was good, but not great. A mediocre story will get 10 points, so you did better than that.

Total score: 81. That's about a B in school, right?