Talk:Social Experiment

Interesting idea. My favorite part is the little clues about the killing-creatures that alluded to the narrator's condition later on. The story needs some serious proofreading from start to finish, though. These things should not be submitted until they're run through a spellchecker. In terms of the plot, it would have been better for the narrator to encounter some of these creatures himself, instead of just sitting and being briefed on them. "Show, don't tell", as they say - and that goes even if a character in-story is the one doing the telling. Javer80 02:08, January 12, 2012 (UTC)