Talk:A Final Goodbye/@comment-24101790-20150629012832/@comment-25755652-20150629034950

I am glad that you enjoyed reading the story.

I also appreciate the suggestions on improving the ending.

The idea I was trying to get across in the end was that Avery had already gone missing and disappeared (died) many years ago.

It was only Helen who had something happen to her on the way of trying to find Avery (which was actually Avery's ghost haunting the cafe/ sticking around and waiting for her aunt who she knew was going to die).

I need to think of some way of making that clear. Like maybe a scene of the cafe people saying that they had seen the wrong girl or something. Like a mistake in identity.

Thank you again for the great feedback.