Talk:The Correctional Society/@comment-25941663-20150129115631

This wasn't bad, but it still has lots of room for improvement.

Plot wise, I don't understand why the narrator didn't warn his friend that a murderous group of lunatics was so close to his beach house. Then he acts all surprised when his friend goes missing. Doesn't make much sense.

Also, you repeat words very often. I had to edit some stuff around because you use the same words so frequently. I suggest you re-read the story and you try and change some of the words. I compiled a list with most frequent words:

"Eventually" "Actually" "Figure"

In future writings be more careful with your wording and try not to repeat yourself too much. Happy writing.