Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26537256-20160716142055/@comment-27838637-20160717140702

I don't think I can really add anything to this other than comment that even if somebody does read only half your story, there is still the fact that they still went out of their way to help you improve.

This story may be well written, but the fact people are struggling to understand it speaks for itself. I might tell a group of friends a joke that only I understand, but what purpose would that serve? Nobody would laugh. Similarly with your story, if nobody understands it, then what is the point of reading it?

I know the story probably has a great deal of meaning behind it, but it doesn't matter unless people understand it. Try to make the meaning of this story a little more obvious - but not too obvious. People say they don't understand it and you don't know what to improve on? Well a good place to start would be to rewrite the story so it is easier to understand in general.

I do hope to see an updated version of the story because I think it might have some potential if the above critiques are taken into account.

A_O.