Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25975226-20150226070959/@comment-25148755-20150226184754

Eh, I think the concept is good but I wouldn't argue it getting deleted. The thing about free verse is that even if you aren't subscribing to a particular syllable pattern it still flows. This doesn't. Some odd word choices (for the sake of rhyming), needless repetition (you use 'head still firmly there' or something close to that effect twice), and odd phrasing ('gravity begins to take effect'....well it actually did that when he dropped, not when he hit the end of the rope) and there's definitely some work to be done. Still though, it actually was a fun read and I don't think you should scrap it out of hand. I definitely think with some revision it could be brought up to snuff.