Talk:Helucciak/@comment-24532164-20161209200822

I liked it. I felt the end was a bit rushed, but only because I love the words you used. None of it really felt flowery or purple prose-y, and that's fantastic. I still struggle with that. It felt very natural and I wished you would have spent more time describing this city's rise, what he saw, and what he thought/felt before and after its appearance. Fantastic. Going to check your page now for more works.