Talk:The Soldier/@comment-27066591-20151011153641

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This is amazing! I was hooked from the start, and yet it didn't feel too rushed. It could be fleshed out with some "normal" day to day activities to try set the scene of him attempting to return to civilian life after the mility (such as him teaching and maybe interactions with a girl he's seeing or something like that), and make a full length novel out of it, but as it stands it's a brilliant short story.

While I agree with what HumboldtLycanthrope said as a whole, I must disagree with it in reference to this story. I think stories need a lot of discription to get the reader drawn in, and as someone who reads very fast, I was drawing in as much information as I could to paint a vivid mental image of the scenes without being slowed down.

Really enjoyed it mate, I'll be sure to read the rest of your stuff tomorrow!