Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24450775-20150518203758/@comment-25037895-20150518213611

Here's this:


 * 1) Some like books on either side of it might have…| Wording issue. Doesn't make much sense.
 * 2) Then again, maybe it was the books I neighbored it with that cause (caused) the problem
 * 3) Maybe if I had put it with Nancy Drew I wouldn’t be writing this
 * 4) we had any ‘real’ books by Edgar| Needs regular quotation marks.
 * 5) This is what I read
 * 6) ‘Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered, weak and weary,| This section could have the single-quotation-marks removed. It also might look better if you use "at the beginning, and" at the end. .
 * 7) “Okay,” I said to the lady “clearly (Clearly) this is some kind of strange typo
 * 8) This time it was ‘The Bells.’ Another| Again, regular quotation marks needed.
 * 9) Needless to say I no longer believed this was
 * 10) Nothing unusual about it’s (its) stories
 * 11) I was fired from the library two days ago when
 * 12) infection before it spreads to (too) far

I like the storyline, I think it is great. The only thing is, it doesn't lead to anything. Up until the last sentence, you had a wonderful thing going, and I feel the action kept building up.

And then it didn't go anywhere...

Why is the book plague so damaging? The story needs some turmoil. It would be a great story if that was added.