Talk:The Secret of the School/@comment-25941663-20150814232958

I liked this pasta. It reminded me of older, more "traditional" creepypastas. It had very nice pacing and the characters were fleshed out nicely. I also enjoyed the descriptions, they were simple and to the point, setting the atmosphere nicely.

The plot was interesting and it had me guessing at what would happen next. It was suspenseful and at times creepy. Nice work.

My only complaint is that you need to brush up on your dialogue "technicalities". By that, I mean how one should properly write down dialogue.

In short, you write dialogue like this:

"Hi Kevin. I'm John," he said. (correct)

instead of:

"Hi Kevin. I'm John." He said. (wrong)

Notice that I end the dialogue with a comma and the first word after that isn't capitalized.

For more on dialogue, I suggest you read this. It's a short guide I wrote about dialogue, I believe it can be of help.

Overall, this was an enjoyable read. It is especially good for a first try, so well done. I hope to see more from you in the future. If you happen to write another piece, let me know in my talk page and I'll get to reviewing it.

Keep it up.