Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20181202003607/@comment-26444017-20181202063310

This is heavily 'Saw' inspired. Now, I like those movies well enough, but they're extremely ubiquitous, and they've killed the genre of 'gore porn as penance'. Beyond that, there's no mention of the person that put Carol there in the first place, which is a major part of the story, unless we are to believe it was Peter, but that raises a host of other questions. It's basically that part at the beginning of the movie that sets up for the larger plot, but there is no larger plot after this; this is the whole story.

Don't take this the wrong way. I just think there needs to be more emphasis on the situation, rather than the nasty act. Even something as small as a mention of eyes watching from a peephole across the room as she leaves would be enough to throw a little more suspense in there.