Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-8674030-20141030052726/@comment-25364542-20141030170824

"inexplicitly appeared" - inexplicably In the first part you should ease off starting so many sentences in the same paragraph with "the scientist". If there's no one else around just use pronouns, it reads easier. Also I feel as though the stating of the fact that he'd been creating an antimatter generator was a little rushed. Maybe spend more time explaining a process. I'll get back to you in more detail later today but there's a few notes for starters.