Talk:In the Middle of the Night/@comment-26054278-20160427013627

I found this to be a pleasant surprise. I wouldn't call it a masterpiece or a story that particularly blew my mind in new and astounding ways, but as far as short stories go, I'd still say this is an excellent effort and one of the better ones on the site.

As this Creepypasta is not lengthy at all, I see no real reason to really delve into a plot summary, so I will just bid all of you to read the story now. It is brief and definitely worth the read. Now, onward with the review:

This pasta works well, in part, because of how brief it is. A story with a twist such as this one needs to engage the reader and then subvert their expectations at the very end, and this one does succeed in that. The plot flows smoothly from event to event.

The way this story is written keeps the tension going in each and every line. There is just enough detail for the reader to capture the horror of the situation going on, while still keeping the pace of the pasta swift and quick. For me, this is possibly the ideal way a short, twist-based Creepypasta should be constructed.

Of course, none of it matters if the ultimate twist is weak or superficial, and I'd say that it does indeed deliver. It isn't obvious enough at first what is going on, so the reader will still have some shock when they realize the truth to the situation. The description of the daughter as the "little devil" and the italicized mommy actually do add a lot to heightening the creepiness of this moment. Despite the little amounts of description, I could still picture this child with fang-like teeth uttering out these words in a demonic voice before flashing a slight grin. The text leaves just enough to the imagination that it completely benefits the story, and I admire a writer who can do that.

Now, it isn't necessarily the greatest twist or the most shocking, but in this case, the execution elevates the material. If I had a more genuine complaint, it would be that I don't find this story the most original. It might be just me, but I do find that it shares quite a few corresponding concepts with another one of your works, Mother's Love. The main difference between them, in my opinion, is the execution of the twist, but they both do share similar elements.

Regardless, I still found this to be superior to most other short Creepypastas on the wiki, and a worthy addition to my list of "Favorite Pastas". 9/10.

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