Talk:The Bottle/@comment-27129274-20151127194850

Now, that was a good read. 10/10

Aside from that, I re-did some parts of the story - a before & after of my edits.

Edits will be in italics, not in the story itself, but in my comment here.

Before: "My only companion was the white march hair the hopped, resolute."

After: "My only companion was the white march hare that hopped beside me, resolute"

Before: "I couldn't shake the feeling that I was being watched, however, causing me to drop my keys."

After: "I couldn't shake the feeling that I was being watched, which caused me to drop my keys."

Before: "For the wind had grown so strong it ripped the pole out the ground"

After: "For the wind had grown so strong it had ripped a pole right out of the ground."

Before: "Goddamn it!"

After: "Damn it!"

Before: "And a mangled body with a hunters knife in its throat."

After: "And a mangled body with a hunter's knife in its throat."