Talk:Insanity/@comment-4993676-20141107030401

Eh... this was a pretty sub-par story, in my opinion. The descriptions were alright, could have been better to deliver the shock that you need. Which brings me to another point... this is a very short story, and most of it is just detailing almost random acts of violence. There was no common flow of events, no actual story format. It can barely be called a story. There was no conflict to resolve. There was not much leading up to the major events, either. Also, the line it ended on was a repeat of the same description given a line above.

It was really corny, as well. This was the same type of villain cliche, doing evil things for no reason. You try to explain it by just going, "oh, well he's insane", without actually detailing what made him that way, or even attempting to. We went into the "story" knowing almost nothing about this man, and we came out of it not knowing much more. He seemingly had no motives to do what he did. You start the story with trying to explain why people are insane, but then drop that whole interesting subject for the MC to kill, and then never pick back up on it. For a story about "insanity" this sure didn't have much to do with insanity. You seem to lack any actual knowledge of psychology, or if you do have it, you didn't show it in this story.

I'd give this a 3/10.