Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24248644-20150130053444/@comment-24101790-20150210215410

Some more typos: "I adored so mcuh (much) when...", "and others where (were) hanging from the ceiling by their necks.", "grandparents(') place ", "As I sat in my dusty old bed, i (I) picked up one of the dolls on the floor.", "They were looking so lovely and beautiful now(period missing)"

Wording issues: "...put all over them(sic) in a plastic bag...", "She told me when i (I) came back from the kindergarden, I didn't whined (whine) or cried (cry)...", "...with (a) creepy yet empty expression on my face."

As it stands, this story needs to be re-worked. The plot feels anemic and lacks build-up. There really isn't much in the way of a conclusion either. You need to build more on the girl's connection to the dolls and their influence on her. Maybe flesh out the mother's memory of the dolls and alter the part about the girl bringing them back in in-front of the mom as that seems a bit unrealistic. (A mother allowing her daughter to go out, route around a dumpster, and bring back in discarded items without an opposition.) Not much happens in this story and the lack of tension really weakens the premise.

I would say that if you upload this story in its current state, it would most likely be deleted for not meeting quality standards.