Talk:The Puppetmaster's Regime/@comment-25068368-20140617101651/@comment-25363374-20140829181730

This is meant to be an answer to Hagenisnotact, who asked for parts that could be improved/re-written:

"the music did this odd thing where the high notes and the low notes sort of mixed with each other" It's called harmony. Pretty much all songs have that thing. Instead you could say it used tritones (the so-called Devil's chord), or simultaneous melodies in different keys, or an ever-changing odd time signature.

"these kids were putting their all into it. I could see the pain in their faces as they hit those high notes" Singing, whether high or low notes, should not hurt the singer, or else they're doing it wrong and it sounds pretty awful. Maybe you can add that it didn't sound good.

"sparking much new debate on the subject." Links? That part kind of takes away from the credibility.

"this recording has been lost, and is only available in the black market of the internet." Where is this black market of the internet you speak of? Maybe instead you can say that it is instantly removed from any website it's posted on by the mods on basis of copyright violations as well as disturbing content.

I liked, however, how the testaments made this story feel like a documentary.