Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28529957-20160523045934/@comment-24101790-20160524013057

Geek2max wrote: Thanks for the professional replies, I did this for school and decided to try posting it on this site for other opinions, if I did rewrite it maybe I could remove the human element from it and write it more like a report?

I'd say that'd be a mistake as stories like Bloop are told in a more clinical manner and that really only benefits a story if there's a strong backing in historical evidence like the Lead Mask case or the Dancing Plague of 1518 (link removed as it is a case of shameless story whoring) whereas your story needs more of a focus on the narrative/story as there really isn't that grounding of 'this event really happened at this time with these people' and instead it's focusing more on evidence/possibilities.