Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24708169-20140319193602/@comment-24077689-20140320025511

It's not a spin-off. To be a spin-off it'd have to directly be in the same universe as JtK, this is a knock off at best.

Think about a story as a fat guy. This story right here is a fat guy. You need to put it on the treadmill and shed some of the excess, so all the descriptions of the friends, all that useless content. Get rid of it. Then once all that fat is gone start building the muscle up, add the pertinent details, add the embellishments.

I can't wait to read your next one!