Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26845103-20160614215315/@comment-24101790-20160614221133

I'm sorry, but this feels like a really generic "chat log story" that has been done a lot with no real variation or originality. As we recently deleted a story with a very similar premise there's quite a bit of overlay if you're looking for a more in-depth analysis.

The character feel extremely unbelievable as well. Take this transcript for example. Who directly reveals this information in a chat with someone they know nothing about?

"WaffleWalrus: 2768 is my address!

Jack789: What?

WaffleWalrus: Whats your address?

Jack789: 1306"

Additionally, why are they still typing if they're so worried that the stalker is actually in their backyard/closet? It seems incredibly unlikely that both would stick around on chat if they feel like they're being directly threatened. I won't bring up the topic of the magically teleporting chat killer as it's a trope that's really been overused and isn't really effective.

For reference, please look over these stories: Annie96 Is Typing..., Are You Still There? (chatroom), and Chat Room D for stories that take the typical premise and flesh it out or address it in a unique way. If this were posted in its current form, it would likely be deleted for being a relatively cookie-cutter chat room story with unbelievable characters and a general plot that really isn't all that involving.