Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20181105182854/@comment-9041013-20181106131033

So it's like a contemporary pop song;four and a half sentences without any meaning, reason or rhyme. What is the actual point of this?! It's not creepy or scary, more like irritating to read. A pointless loop of a few sentenses that are kind of supposed to be phrased differently.

The tenses and possessive cases are off at points

What is he even meant?!