Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27123781-20151102043546/@comment-26399604-20151105042040

AlwaysStaryIrrelevant,

First off, good job on the story. I felt like it was an interesting perspective on the angel and demon concept. The story itself was written very well too and reading it was entertaining. I enjoyed both parts overall, the second one more so though.

Another aspect I liked was the split of the two occurrences and later revealing the connection as a worldwide event. Most stories have an incident isolated to one place or known to a few people. However, it was a nice change to first see such an event up close to encapsulate the encounter and later reveal its global impact, so we understood what other people were experiencing.

Also, you did well in setting two new characters to the forefront of the story and creating a relevancy for them. Of course based on the traits of the entities, it was obvious where the story was going, but I still liked the second part more, thanks to how the stage was set in the first.

I will say the stories, mainly the first part, render somewhat of a cliffhanger after the buildup and speculation as the events begin to come together. Yet, I can tell it was intentional to showcase the angel, foreshadow the events of the demon's coming, and eventually present the demon itself at the end. In other words, it felt like there was going to be more to the first part, but there wasn't. Yet, I won't knock you for that because the second part somewhat fills those holes.

Overall, I enjoyed the story. I like the openness and speculation for the angel and demon, why are they doing this? For how long they have been and will do it? It's a nice thin veil for the unknown. Although, I would have liked to see more reactions from the people after experiencing contact with the demon, but the stories hold together fine without it. Good job!