Talk:The Comfy and Cozy Cabin/@comment-44645818-20191218200800

Liked this one, especially the slow reveal of the speaker's backstory and the sense it made with his actions and inner monologue.

The alternate dimension cabin was eerie, but I felt like some details seemed derivative. The salt turning into purple crystal--fine, hadn't seen anything like that before. Really liked how certain things just changed material composition suddenly--extremely mysterious. But the spiked stairs reminded me of Silent Hill, and the doors/windows disappearing would have been more disturbing if they didn't remind me of the Upside Down somehow.

My biggest gripe was the sense-switching. Noticed some phrases in the present tense that made me wonder if we were flashing forward.

Nightmare about the decomposing eyeball--gross, effective.

Cindy as a living portal--chillingly executed.

You made me wish that Mark could have saved Penny, which goes to show how well you wrote both of those characters.

The ending could have been weak, but the lingering ties to the otherworld and the suggested existence of more corpse people was enough to keep me intrigued. I kind of want to see what they do to Mark. And of course, I still feel sorry for the regret he continues to live with.

Great read, thank you!