Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29740160-20151222172812/@comment-27008899-20151226154142

Ok, you have some work to do. This come across as a reddit post. Pasta readers need more than just the facts. We want to know every detail: conversations had before going in, who was standing where, who initiated the bet and what was on the line, deeper description. You have the bones of a good story, but no meat.