Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33698957-20190117192604/@comment-36815674-20190118055329

Ok so I'm not going to tell you about the bold text because Dr. Bob did that already. The story it self needs some work but your grammar is pretty good.

I didn't get any creep factor out of the story, it needs more of that skin crawling, eerie feeling Etc. The first paragraph is the most important of it all, it's your chance to grab the reader and hook them.

👇 you started off good add to it to keep them in the loop.

(Do you ever get a song stuck in your head? Most people find it annoying - a minor inconvenience, but I dread the day a fresh set of lyrics start looping around my brain.)