Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5400198-20160722183409/@comment-5400198-20160722195416

EmpyrealInvective wrote: You might not want to jump to conclusions. While the layout did present a lot of problems (which will be addressed below), I actually deleted it because the story was not up to quality standards due to a number of punctuation, capitalization, and quite a bit of story issues. The reason why I thought this was because a previous admin wrote that in his M4R. Sorry for the misunderstanding.

About the poem tags, I had no idea how those got in there. I just copy-and-pasted the document from word with the file being a rich text file.

Addressing the lack of description: I personally hate paragraphs of description. Every time I read a book or a story drowned in that sort of thing, I immediately get turned off reading it. It is more of a personal thing. I do agree that I was a bit too vague, but I just personally desipse overly-descriptive writing. I will try to write more description when I rewrite this story (still up to debate about that).

Addressing the point about being a cooker-cutter story: I will admit that I did only split the story up to make it more unique. The main problem is that I don't have much experience in writing horror. I mainly write sci-fi and fantasy, so stories like such as this one is a brand new experience for me.

Addressing the points about the Shadow Kid (creature name still in progress): This relates to my inexperience to the horror genre so excuse me for using such a generic trope. As for the bit he says, "Stealing, stealing, stealing kills", this is relevant to the character as the Shadow Being was present in my previous Creepypasta "Bloodied Trees and Bright Lights" and said, "Drugs, drugs, drugs kill."

Addressing the point about nameless characters: Again, the reason why I chose this for the story was to make it stand out more from the generic Creepypasta. I really should have had given the characters names, but then again it would not have not made them more relatable. I've never been good with characters so I am not really surprised that this character-driven story was not well recieved.

As I said, I have no experience in writing horror (apart from my previous Creepypasta). I however did not post this story on this Wiki without going through and rewriting it. I was under the illusion that I did a decent job but looking back on it, I really didn't. I just wanted to write this story to improve on the mythos from the previous creepypasta I wrote. Again, I thank you for taking you time to correct my mistakes. I will try my best to work on them and produce better stories.

And if I don't, I'll just stick to my day job. :P