Talk:Sammy Hates Sleeping in the Kitchen/@comment-26030957-20150725184354

Aw, poor Sammy. I really liked this story and enjoyed reading it very much. The writing was crisp and clear, flowed very smoothly and contained some very nice metaphors and similes. The opening paragraph hooked me, needles are very creepy and I immediately wanted to know where this story was going. But it wasn't that creepy. It had a twist ending but I don't know if that makes it exactly a creepypasta. I was never really scared, unnerved or shocked. Maybe if you had had his infant child sleeping upstairs I would have been more emotionally invested and horrified. If his child had died and he felt dread and guilt because he should have taken more notice as to why his dog wouldn't sleep inside I would have really felt awful for him. Dead babies can be much more unsettling than dead dogs, but I tend to always take things too far. Also, what's up with the video camera? It really contributes nothing to the story. There is an old adage of writing that if a gun is mentioned in a story at some point that gun must go off. I feel that if the video camera was seen as a gun it never went off.

So, I enjoyed your story and thought it was written very well, though I feel it could have been creepier, and I look forward to reading more of your work, which I will surely do at some point.