Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33077235-20190630005539/@comment-5306249-20190702053124

Grammar and tonal issues aside, i think the biggest issue with this draft is chronology. The transitions and way of describing events makes no sense, which arguably, if he’s in a loop, should be the easiest thing to write down. As Spaghetti pointed out, i think you should focus on giving the story a clear beginning, middle and end despite the plot’s contents, and figure out a resolution.