User talk:Sykokillah/Archive 1

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LOLSKELETONS (talk) 23:03, January 4, 2014 (UTC)

STOP IT
Stop spamming up the signature thread. SOMEGUY123 (talk) 16:27, April 2, 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for replying to Nefarious the tree. Would you please tell me where the grammar was. Appreciate it alot! (Sorry to bother you).

I left an answer!
Just to let you know, I left you a response on the AMA. Here ya go!

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Indefinitesilence/AMA_Super_Fun_Time_Yes

Indefinitesilence (talk) 01:40, May 23, 2014 (UTC)

Got your message...
Hey!

Thanks for the welcome! :)

I'd be glad to give your story a proofread or two. I actually *like* editing stuff!

I also notice that we share a birthday. (The one I posted is bullshit, because I'm a bit paranoid about posting my personal info online...So I gave the date of my favourite shipwreck instead.) So happy birthday to both of us in a week! :)

From one creepy-ass Gemini to another.It&#39;s getting colder here... (talk) 18:03, May 30, 2014 (UTC)

Why would you put my pasta into the Delete Now category?

Sykokillah, you say you sketch, but what do you sketch exactly.ScArEd YeT? 04:11, June 27, 2014 (UTC)CHECK UNDER YOUR BED

how do I do that
hey friend I was wondering how you did the bullet point in that blog article I read. would you tell me how? please, Im far too dumb to figure it out.

if you don't know what im talking about it was that blog article where you said leprechaun poo (or something like that)

sure

 * 1) copy the url; paste it right where you want to put it
 * 2) highlight the link and click "external link" button
 * 3) then brackets will appear on the link
 * 4) then add a space to the end of the url and type anything that you want

it should look like this [http://creepy... LINK TEXT HERE]

SoPretentious | (talk)  11:20, July 7, 2014 (UTC)

well
that was a failed example but hopefully you get the idea

SoPretentious | (talk)  11:22, July 7, 2014 (UTC)

Deletions
When marking a story for deletion, please use the "deletenow" template. This is done by simply adding " " at the very beginning of the story in source mode. It makes it easier for us administrators to quickly see a reason why a story needs to be deleted. You can read more about it here. Thanks.

Mystreve (talk) 17:17, July 7, 2014 (UTC)

RE: reading request
Hey brother that is one long story you got there I'll still read your story though. Read for read? here read these: Para-Phenomenal and Crescent Forest

SoPretentious | (talk)  01:47, July 9, 2014 (UTC)

Thank ya kindly!
Yeah, I am a fan of Post-Apocalyptic Solitude. I got a few others that literally no one has commented on or edited (I'd assume mainly because they are bad.)

Just for future reference, if you notice any mistakes in my story, feel free to correct them. For some reason, three or four mistakes always make it through my revision. Also, you have any stories you want me to check out?

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 14:37, July 9, 2014 (UTC)

Bloody Snow (Bien hecho!)
It took me a while to get around to reading Bloody Snow, but I am glad I found the time to read it. It is stories like that that make me wish we had a post-apocalypic category so I could more easily find them and enjoy them. I enjoyed the part with the kittens and had a quick moment of fear when he was talking about their dwindling supplies where my mind instantly jumped to the worst possible solution. You did a good job of conveying the desperate nature of the protagonist's situation and their struggle to survive in an inhospitable environment.

I am going to finish up my short stories (I like experimenting with styles/genres even if they are problematic and rather not leave it with those paltry few stories.) and then I'm going to get back to my post-apocalyptic novella. I had a large hiccup at the start of it where I decided to write in first person present tense (Which is not working out for me, so I am switching it to a more comfortable stye, past tense.) Best of luck, as always, lemme know if you got any other stories you'd like to share.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 05:11, July 10, 2014 (UTC)

Hello, I don't know where to submit my creepypasta. My apoligies for not verifying it. But may you direct me to the place where I submit my creepypasta?

PsychoManStudios (talk) 21:09, July 10, 2014 (UTC)

Notes on 'White World'
Okay so you asked me to read your pasta. It was pretty good overall and I'll give you some constructive feedback!

1. It's quite short and while that's okay for some pastas, I feel yours needs to be a bit longer since is a prequel. Put in more description about the background or something. Anything to make it slightly longer.

2. Which tense are you writing it in? Some bits are in present and others in past and don't fit in together.

3. Even though you don't do this very often, try to start less sentences with 'I'.

4. Don't use short sentences everywhere: ''I quote: I was frightened. Couldn’t believe what I saw. Was this an elaborate hoax? I hoped so. ''Vary your sentence length because short sentences one after the other throughout won't make it as dramatic as you might think - it just makes the writing look sloppy.

3. I've fixed some of your writing for you; grammar errors and so on are the bits I changed are in bold and underlined. Most of these are grammar corrections but some are simply suggestions so feel free to change the words I've used if you think of a better option (which I doubt, but yeah). I think you'll find my version flows better but it's not set in stone. Also, you might want to sort out your paragraphing because one sentence on each line isn't great.

18th May. It was an important date for the world, the day that nature defied all we knew about its four seasons.

The days leading up to the summer vacation were warm, but on that day, it started snowing. This baffled even the most trained climatologists  - a lot of research was conducted, but in the end it was concluded to be a freak snowstorm.

It started in Japan, The Land of The Rising Sun, and made its way to America.

I was both curious about the event and relieved that there was going to be a release from the heat of summer.

 Doing what most teenagers would do, I had snowball fights with my friends. At least I  thought that was what other teenagers would do, since we’re all a bit immature.

The snow had melted overnight, but a blizzard attacked just two days later. This wasn't  norma l;  once again,  the climatologists and scientists didn’t know what to make of it.

The next day the blizzard had stopped, but the temperature continued to decline steadily. During the blizzard, it had already dropped to ten (we don't tend to write numbers in numerical form in a story) degrees Celsius or fifty degrees Farenheit. However, it didn’t stop there. In a few hours, it was already only nine degrees (you don't need a 'celcius' here).

Then, eight.

7.

6.

It decreased to the point where your breath could be seen in the air (okay, I've changed that whole phrase, but I think my version is better). Probably somewhere around two degrees (once again, I've changed the whole thing!).

For a few days, it was fun. A lot of snowball fights, sledging, and school had closed since the entire campus was covered in crisp, white snow. Even the gate to the entrance (try not to repeat 'entire' again) was blocked.

A news broadcast showed a clip from  Italy or somewhere - maybe it was Spain. I didn't (don't switch tenses in between!)  care. People were running around everywhere; or rather, attempting to, however they couldn’t run very fast in the ankle-deep snow. Suddenly, I spotted something large moving in the distance, even though the camera quality was so bad I couldn’t tell what it was.

 The second half of a person vanished inside the thing (what is the 'thing'?  expain in more detail) as a crimson tint became visible. It was some kind of animal - the camera started moving away from the animal, while the person who held the camera said something, although it wasn’t audible (haha, you don't read sounds!  search up on google what 'legible' means) over cacophony of screams. The clip ended there abruptly.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">I was frightened - I couldn’t  believe what I saw. Was it  an elaborate hoax? I hoped so - it wasn’t plausible that these ‘beasts’ would appear out of nowhere and start chomping on people. This assumption somewhat calmed my nerves.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">The weather kept getting worse and worse, going outside was tough and the cold was near unbearable.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">Reports of the ‘beasts’ from all over the world flooded the news channels. Fear filled my thoughts once again  and I endured many sleepless nights thinking about those dreaded monsters.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">Only a few channels that weren’t news channels remained, broadcasting old reruns. One by one, they shut down too.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">In the end, one news channel remained, the last news report was the temperature, minus ten degrees '''. B y this time we were wearing all the layers we could fit into'''.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">We all knew what this was - the apocalypse. ( Ha, dude really?!)

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">Suddenly, fearing for their lives, people around us started praying devoutly to their respective gods. Being part of an athiest family from birth, I was raised without religion, so we dismissed it as the petty superstitions of fearful people.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">While the others prayed, my family bought a month’s worth of food and the necessary clothes to survive this ‘ice age.’

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">Then came the beasts. I had spent long hours thinking about them and whether they would get to America, but  my questions were answered with a phone call.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);"> Watching the news (you don't need that part in brackets), all that was broadcasted was just the same old weather reports and ‘beast’ attacks. It was boring and I was trying to remember any movies I had that I felt like watching.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">My cell phone started ringing and vibrating on the table beside me. Picking it up, I checked the contact name. It was Zach, my best friend.  (You don't need that next sentence at all)

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">“‘Sup, man?” I asked casually. I was surprised to be met with heavy breathing on the other end of the cell as Zach started talking.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);"> “Dude…" he pants, "C-can I come to yo-your house, please?" He was coughing and panting hard.   I figured he was probably stuttering because of the cold. Who could blame him?

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">“Umm, sure, of course you can come to my house,” I replied, considerably bemused by his panting and odd ''' questions. But''' I didn’t have time to think as he quickly replied:

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">“G-g-good. I-I’m right outside; open-nn the door.” What? He was outside already?

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">Sure enough, when I opened the door he was standing right there, shivering in the cold frost. But there was blood on his woolen sweater.

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">A lot of blood. It was splattered on his sweater, and some was on his gloves. As soon as I opened the door, he made his way in.

<p style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);margin-bottom:0px!important;">I was afraid. Why was he covered in blood? What had he done?

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);margin-bottom:0px!important;">

<p class="MsoNormal" style="color:rgb(212,212,213);margin-bottom:0px!important;">Good work.

Lines
You can create an hr line by typing four hyphens, like this: Please don't put a massive amount of underscores to achieve this effect, as it is really bad formatting.

LOLSKELETONS (talk) 15:21, July 23, 2014 (UTC)

Re-read your story
Bloody Snow I wasn't sure if I liked it the first time I read it but i read it again after a week and t seemed a lot better

SoPretentious | (talk)  06:18, July 24, 2014 (UTC)

Review Request!
I'm in the process of publishing my story The Soldier in a serial style (currently up to part 5). I've gotten exactly 0 spontaneous feedback on it so I'm starting to take matters into my own hands by asking reviews of people I know are active and give good constructive criticism. If you have some time and don't mind, I'd love it if you'd take a look. Thanks!

Shadowswimmer77 (talk) 02:05, July 27, 2014 (UTC)

The subject of rape
Don't joke about it. Not in blogs or anywhere else around here. Thank you.

Mystreve (talk) 11:54, August 1, 2014 (UTC)

Thanks!
I've been trying to only reply to people's comments on their talk pages, because otherwise I'd feel like I was artificially inflating my comments count. But, I'm glad you enjoyed it (and thanks, I fixed the error).

As for how scary the movie is...that's something I've been struggling with, and may revise the story at some point to fix it, but I'm not sure how. I was trying to build-up one cliche twist ("haunted film"), and then hit the audience with something else entirely ("the film is normal, but the director is evil"), which leaves comments about how scary the movies were something of an anomaly.

My current head-canon is that people said the movies were so amazing to keep up the hype, because they needed 144 people for the ritual, but I'm not sure if that's completely satisfactory.WatcherAzazel (talk) 20:56, August 5, 2014 (UTC)

answer
It's called the Trans-Allegheny Lunatic Asylum. There's a decent little wikipedia page about it, and at the bottom it discusses the paranormal research. As for the youtube videos, you'll just have to look into them, I've never seen them.

Jay Ten (talk) 17:29, August 17, 2014 (UTC)

one thing you think your a boy but i dont get it because your either a boy or a girl. witch one?

Nola20011 (talk) 18:30, August 17, 2014 (UTC)Nola

did you hear jane's story about jeff if not watch it here Jane The Killer: The True Story - YouTube listen to the hole story from Nola20011 (talk) 19:41, August 17, 2014 (UTC)Nola

Sorry I was at camp and couldnt respond. Washington state is in the U.S.Aand Moscow is actually my favourite place to be when I went I went to the red square .BENNY Drowned (talk) 02:39, August 23, 2014 (UTC)BENNY Drowned

Lay off Jeff the Killer
Yes, it's bad, I don't like it any more than you do, but you've made your opinion clear. Please stop going into the comments and insulting people. ImGonnaBeThatGuy (talk) 12:39, August 23, 2014 (UTC)

oh bro, sorry I didn't know  im still kind of new and yesterday I was busy BENNY Drowned (talk) 00:44, August 24, 2014 (UTC) BENNY Drowned

review
Just wanted to say thanks again for giving my story in the workshop a read yesterday. Everything you said was spot on. I didn't know if you saw my last message before I took it down, so I just wanted to let you know I took it down to work on those issues. I appreciate you taking the time to read it, because I know it was long and no one else seemed willing.

Jay Ten (talk) 16:14, August 24, 2014 (UTC)

Done
Done, at work at the moment so I didn't have time to really read them. I will check them out and give some feedback when I get home. (I'm nosy like that...)

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:57, September 4, 2014 (UTC)

RE:
Little did you know, but my ears were already stapled to my forehead to begin with... If you don't want me to read 'em I won't, but I will say that that would be a missed opportunity for critique. It's your decision though.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:51, September 4, 2014 (UTC)

Banned From Chat
You have been banned from chat for 2 hours for using the word "retarded" to describe something in a negative way, also known as a slur. If you are still banned after the alotted time, please leave a message on my talk page.

<span style="background-color:black; border:ridge 4px #0B610B;padding:2px;cursor:crosshair;font-family:Verdana;"><span title="My userpage!" style="color:#0B610B;Font-Size:128%"> _ ChaoZStrider •  Talk  Contributions  Edit Count  13:56, October 5, 2014 (UTC)

Re
I haven't read it yet, but I think you kind of shoot yourself in the foot by saying you think the story "sucks" in the author's note. That may be why no one is reviewing it. If the author thinks it sucks, do you really think someone would want to read it? Just a thought. Mystreve (talk) 13:59, October 6, 2014 (UTC)

Blood for Michael
Second draft up if you want to give it a read:  http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:361522 WatcherAzazel (talk) 15:59, November 5, 2014 (UTC)

Hey man

I really aprpreciate that you read my blog posts. I also read your creepypasta, 'bloody snow' and i thought it was really good.

Ravagerofrepent (talk) 11:59, December 20, 2014 (UTC)

RE:
Actually as no one has compiled a list of urls on my talk of people that were participating and their reviews, "School Sux" (and my revisions to make it readable) may be lost to the ages. All is not lost however, there are still ten days left.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:24, December 21, 2014 (UTC)

Ffffuuuuuu-

I'll need a little bit of time to look through the story again and select th three pages that are best/worst. Keep at it with the WW and remember to encourage people to use/help in it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:55, December 21, 2014 (UTC)

Hey man,

I posted what I have so far in the writers workshop. I hope I'm taking the story in the right direction. It's there if you'd like to review it and give any feedback. Thanks!

FYI
New story, would love your opinion: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/John_Frie WatcherAzazel (talk) 13:46, January 4, 2015 (UTC)

Tense
This was actually an issue that came up in the Writer's Workshop, and I made a conscious choice to leave it as it was. Basically, the speaker is unscripted, telling the story in what starts as a formal manner, then gets less formal as he goes along. So, the tense changing is actually something that happens in-character.WatcherAzazel (talk) 04:23, January 5, 2015 (UTC)

Pasta Noir is complete!! Posted it today. Let me know what you thought in the comments. Thanks.

Review Request
Hello.

Someone suggested I should ask for your help in reviewing this new story of mine called "The Gorgon's Smile." It is currently on the Writer's Workshp. Although it got a few positive reviews, I'm kind of worried it might get rejected on the main wikia for not being Creepypasta enough. I was wondering if you ever get the time, would you mind taking a good look at it? It's rather long, by the way.

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:416018

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 02:38, January 18, 2015 (UTC)

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 18:12, January 30, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 18:12, January 30, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "Chapter 4 Blog" comment
Thanks! I don't know how long the story itself is going to be but i hope to finish it soon. I want to take my time with the story though and although it's my first Creepypasta, i want to make as good and fun to read as possible. Granted, the story will rely a lot on psychological horror and there is a lot of build up in the first 4 chapters. However, i think people might get into the characters and maybe the story, but I'll still flesh the story out a bit more.

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 23:16, January 31, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 23:16, January 31, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "Alice in Wonderland" message
Oh YEAH! That's the one! I think one VHS release of this adaptation changed the ending so that way it wouldn't be so scary for kids or something. To be honest, I don't really blame them. While i'm not the biggest fan of ending changes (unless it was offered as an "Alternate Ending" feature on a DVD or something thus making it optional to watch) but I guess with VHS that didn't usually have interactive menus, I can see how including the changed ending as an option would be difficult.

Here's what the Jaberwocky looked like in this adaptation:



Hailey Sawyer (talk) 02:03, February 1, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 02:03, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

Thanks
Thanks so much for reviewing my pasta Clown Dogs. I just posted a new on - The Abalone Thief. If you get a chance check it out, I'd love to hear what you think. }:)

HumboldtLycanthrope (talk) 01:14, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

Your talk page
seems to be huge. If you want to I can archive it for you. They don't know about us. They never heard of us. 02:06, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "Silly Looking" message
While the monster itself seems a bit silly looking by today's standards, I think part of what makes this Jabberwocky scary is the build up and the atmosphere. Not to mention the size of it. If you saw a full size model of this Jabberwocky, it towers over Alice! This not only instills more fear into the audience, but instills more fear into Alice as well. It's bad enough that she's scared that her parents and cat cannot see or hear her, but increasing her fear by coming face to face with the Jabberwocky in her own home seems really tramatizing for Alice! Oh and it ends on a cliffhanger which really pushes the scariness over the edge. It's pretty dark for something that started out so bright, colourful, and lighthearted in comparison.

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 20:04, February 1, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 20:04, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

Your Creepypastas
Hey There! It's been awhle since we've last talked. Anyway, i was looking at the list of Creepypastas you wrote on your profile page. I might consider reviewing one of them. I'm not an admin so i'm not doing it for housekeeping or anything. I'm also stuck for ideas on what's going to happen next in my Creepypasta. I could send it to you via Pastebin or your email address to see what you think of it and what i can add.

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 23:02, February 8, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 23:02, February 8, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "Tests" message
Ah Thanks! That'll be great! I started reading one of your pastas already. The pasta i was reading was "The Pet" and so far it doesn't seem too bad. I'll save your email into my tablet and i'll send you the story as soon as i can. But if i send you the email, can you let me know on my talk page if it went through or not? Thank You!

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 18:16, February 9, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 18:16, February 9, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "I got It" Message
Oh nice to hear! Yeah i may upload it to Spinpasta but the story may have an unexpected ending though i won't reveal too much of what it is. Basically, it may push it out of the genre's formula a bit. By the way when you finish reading it, you can review it if you want. I'm stuck for ideas on the fifth chapter anyway.

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 01:05, February 12, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 01:05, February 12, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "Psychosis poll" message
Yeah. If you're just going to use murder porn for the sake of using it without much purpose, then it can drasitcally affect the quality of your pasta. It reminds me of those Lost Episode Creepypastas that use "Hyper Realism" (i.e Hyper realistic blood) without much purpose. I feel like the ending could've been better if the protaganist as well as the audience didn't know if the events were real or just hallucinations brought on by lack of sleep. While I do like the concept of "A character becoming more unstable via medicine or any other internal or external force" I feel like Necrosleep copies Psychosis to the point of noticabiliy and doesn't even much much of an effort to make it unique enough to be called its own story. Here are a list of things Necrosleep and psychosis have in common:
 * 1) Just like in Psychosis, Necrosleep's story is told via multiple journal entries.
 * 2) Both Protaganists live in cheap, run down apartments.
 * 3) Both Protagainists slowly lose their sanity as the story progresses

Those are basically the three biggest things Necrosleep ripped from Psychosis. There are also a lot of other things Necrosleep ripped off from Psychosis but if i were to list them all, i'd be here all day. For some reason, it won't let me reply to you on the Original page that the poll was on.

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 23:28, February 12, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 23:28, February 12, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "Replying Instructions" message
Ok. So let me see if I have this correct. In order to reply to someone on blog posts, I must click the "Reply" button on my comment and it will appear under your reply? You know! It's things like this that make me wonder if the designers of the Wikia were just an army of Derpy Hooves.



By the way i have a new blog post related to "Dreams/Sleep" pastas. Here: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:TheAzumangaDaiohFan/Favorite_%22Dream/Sleep%22_Pasta%3F_2/13/15

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 23:38, February 13, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 23:38, February 13, 2015 (UTC)

Reply to "Derpy Hooves" message
Yeah Derpy is really adorable! Anyway, thanks for leaving a comment on my new blog. I guess there aren't too many people who read "Dreams/Sleep" Creepypastas because i haven't gotten many comments on the blog.

Hailey Sawyer (talk) 23:28, February 14, 2015 (UTC)Hailey SawyerHailey Sawyer (talk) 23:28, February 14, 2015 (UTC)