Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4138999-20150315195906/@comment-25148755-20150317180010

Well, for one, you have a bunch of your paragraphs repeated more than once. If this was how the story was posted (and not an error that occurred when you were copying it to the workshop) that probably had a lot to do with why it was deleted. Additionally, you've got quite a few grammatical errors throughout. That's likely the other main reason, as it was a fairly original concept.