Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27018401-20150421121313/@comment-27018401-20150429155633

Punkfaye wrote: Magnifique.

Few typos. Paragraph two, line two: You need to put 'the' between 'like and 'guy.' When Andy and Mr. Anderson are talking, I'd remove 'don't worry.' That seems oddly out of context. And the writing besides the images still bugs me, but it is a minor complaint. Otherwise it is fine.

Also, I just realized the toy cat kinda did to the real cat what Andy had intended. That is to say, smashed it to bits. Kind of a creepy parallel. Then again, I may be reading too much into it. If this were longer you could have had him try to destroy the toy, only to have it happen to his cat. Anyway, the edits look great dude. Hope it makes the wiki. Done.

Wow, that's indeed a strange coincidence, I haven't realised it till now.

Gotta thank you again for all your help, you've been really useful and i think that the pasta is way better now and it has some chances to get accepted.