Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25825682-20150408043526/@comment-26027963-20150415135620

Terror Beneath review, Part 2

Started where I left off, left at "any other place before Seattle".

Listen. It's the same problem, the storyline seems solid, but there's a lot of comma problems, not as many as last time, but still a lot. There doesn't seem to be any plot holes, but the overall feel of the story is shocking your able to create something that a lot of people cannot. I love the minorities you added, like his studded, the cemetery visit, etc. Why do I have a feeling that the leak is going to turn into something big?

I love it so far, but you still have the punctuation errors onthat need fixing. I didn't see that much grammar errors, though. Other wise, I love the story.

Thanks for giving me the chance to review this! You should try some writing competitions, I think you would be very good at writing any story! I'll probably put more than one review, but I might not. I hope I will though!!!