Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20181117043002/@comment-9041013-20181117195456

I'll be honest, this is largely uninteresting. There's not much a hook here and the guy that "thinks he knows what's scary because scary movies" is just a stupid archtype that makes me want to actually legitemately scare the living hell out of people just to make them feel actual fear.

"I was enjoying her fear", no my child,you were not, in fact. He was enjoying the adrenaline rush that her story gave him, if it was a good actress giving him bullshit he'd feel the same.

The idea of Shadow People, or related creatures is kind of dull on top of it all... Because it's been overexposed in a bad way, like Slenderman. Also, love the random teleportantion there... because, reasons?

Also, you have to fix your technical side, this whole thing is written weirdly.