Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27091999-20151019200544/@comment-27008899-20151020115022

It's not bad. I agree with what Whitix said regarding the paragraghs. I dont think I would do the puzzle that you said, but this could be the plot off a different story. The reason is your MC would need to find each one. This process could fill a novel. Although the mystery may help with the creepy factor. Perhaps to keep it from becoming a novel you could have the MC be the one to find the cards without drawing them.