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Thank you for the feedback ^^ I'll definitely use ambiance when I'm describing his first romp into the gallery, but at this point in the story, I'm more concerned with characterizations and letting the reader construct the backstory of the works along with the protagonist.

My main problem getting back into it has been figuring out "how" he ended up in solitude in the facility. At first I wanted it to be a dream, but then there's no stakes to the pasta. The other idea was that the place was recently sold, and it was the main character's job to retreive one of the paintings so it can be taken and sold on auction, but I'm still scouring for ideas.

In terms of the way its written and the presentation of the snippit, is it too unemotional/logistical to be entertaining? I don't want my readers to have to slog through it because it's too wordy, detached, or whatever. It would be nice to have a good balance of both good style and substance to keep readers interested and not laughing their asses off at it XD