Talk:Mistakes/@comment-25052433-20150927014754

This was a really amazing story that sort of snuck up me halfway through. Realizing that Marko was now trapped and would likely have to explain his own death to the cops really had a great bite to it, a twist worthy of Bradbury for sure.

The closing line also hit well, and added to the over all mental jungle gym that was the plot. Your pacing and length was just about as perfect as one can hope for, and the plot was original and creative. Fantastic work, keep writing!