Talk:Laughing Jack/@comment-25655620-20141227172335

I'm really tired of seeing this stories on every fan art i see.

This is horrible, I don't care if it's still better than eyeless jack, it's horrible.

For starters, the story is just a giant build-up for the grand finale, this kind of stories aren't always bad, but it's really hard to make an ending that makes up for so much build-up, this story however, doesn't even try, it's just a 5 second death scene with useless blood and gore, it leaves you with a sense of "WTF, is this the ending? that's it?"

and then, all the other problems are listed here.

1: The police tells the mother and james to go back in the house after a thief (or was it jack?) just left. Are they the worst policemen ever?

2:The story have gore for no fucking reason, not only that, but it's children gore, that's the worst type of gore.

3: Why put the dog in the story, just to kill him? Also, his death doesn't even help making the story scarier beacause the story barely talks about him.

4:The dream is useless and makes no sense. I understand if she saw Jack and then had the dream, but she just heard about him, thinking it was imaginary.

5:If the mother knew something terrible could happen, why did she stayed n the house? Couldn't she go to a friend's house? Also, it's not hard to stay awake ONE fucking night.

6:The character of Jack makes no sense. I actually have a list of problems just for him.

1: Why does he kill the kid after some days? Why can't he just kill him like slendy?

2: How is he able to mess with the kid without anyone noticing? I mean, if I saw a creepy             black and white clown giving candy to a kid with no parents, that's when I would call the             police.

3: Why the fuck is he creepy? I know there is a lot of fan art of him in his "happy" state,             when he supposedly became friend with the children, but here, james describes him in his         normal, creepy state. I was a kid and I saw Jack, I would run like hell and tell my mom to             move to another house.

5: He is not explained at all. If you are goin to make a human magic monster, at least have         some explenation for him. (I know there is an origin story, but this is the original, i'm stiking         with this one)

So yeah, this story is shit. Why is this still here? We have quality control now, fuck!

At least the author of Eyeless Jack had dignity and deleted the story himself, why doesn't this author do that too?