Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5813834-20140702153906/@comment-24352864-20140702165314

So, I guess is that the main character is having this weird dreams and had to see some sort of consultant. Then, not wanting to spend a lot on therapy, he opts for the pills which, makes it worse? I think that's what's implied when he said: "My only choice was to take the pills. My only choice was the wrong one." I'm not sure if that's what it is but I am going to use that assumption.

I saw a bunch of minor typos in here. Not to say that it's very bad but, just take it to mind before publishing.

The whole first part of the story had nice build-up. There is quite a bit of detail in what he is describing as he goes through the ordeal. The ending part was kind of anti-climactic though. It kind of cut just as the emotions are at highest intensity.

With the assumption I did above (the pills make the dreams worse), I think it would be better if he calmly accepts the pills first, goes home and takes it before sleeping. Feeling a bit of relief as sleep started seeping in, he finally looked forward to dreamless nights and untroubled rest after a long while. Few minutes though, he wakes up to find himself in the exact same spot and the exact same situation. The room was dark, the candle fell and the cries started resonating. It was then that he knew. He knew that his only choice was the wrong one.