Talk:Jack's County, New Orleans 2012/@comment-25052433-20140919171532

This was an interesting read. I specifically liked the way it changed perspectives a lot. So, let's take a deeper look.

-The biggest issue I see with this one is a lack of research. Otherwise, the story itself was interesting, though you should go back and change up some of the format. No need to indent lines and such.

-New Orleans, my beloved home town. Besides the 7 years that I spent in the military, I have in spent my entire life here. So, as I was reading this, the word county caused me to cringe almost every time. Let me explain.

-Louisiana has no counties. We have parishes down here. Now, a parish and a county are the same thing, but for whatever reason, we stuck with the European concept and called the parishes. So, I would consider changing that one.

-Not sure what Jack County is supposed to be. There is no Jack Parish in Louisiana. If there were, it would be called something like 'St. Jack Parish' or some such term.

-There are no hills in New Orleans. Well, there is one, it's called Monkey Hill and it's at the Audubon Zoo. It's about 25 feet in elevation, we used to roll down it when we were kids.

-New Orleans is a city, not a state. So, in a few instances in this story, you described places within the city, and then used the city as the designator. While we do have certain parts of town that have their own names, like Gentilly, Mid City, Lake Vista and The Marigny, none of those are actual towns in themselves, but just parts of town.

The suburbs, such as Metairie, Kenner, Slidell and Algiers are all cities in their own rights that just sit immediately next to New Orleans.

Overall, I liked your story, and I like the fact that you chose to write it up in my birthplace. However, to make this story work, you need to do the research.

Best of luck with your writing.