Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180721192302/@comment-9041013-20180722153125

Well, the doctor covered most of it, I found it a little confusing, is this an allegorical story or a case of a hillbilly bunch acting out as a result of a trauma inflicted by their fathers alcoholism, mainly appearing as alcohol to the pratagonist who is drunk and also most likely an Alcoholic.

I think you can fix this by specifying whether the Jacks are humans named Jack, or not.

As for the rest, I don't have much to add that wasn't said before