Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25907694-20150303002302/@comment-26169026-20150304204909

Until reading the comments, I had no idea that the woman was in a coma. I assumed, as the reader, that she was placed in an asylum for whatever reason. The way its written, I felt like she had some type of sound disorder. The music seemed to be what was setting her off.

I totally understand writing on the fly. I do it myself. It needs work, but if you go back and explain things clearer, I'm sure the finished product will be pretty decent.

I hope this helps.