Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5952769-20170125115538/@comment-28428152-20170331183715

Paragraph 30: "You wouldn't think there'd be any sort of large and loud equipment next to their south wall. But on that night, you'd be wrong." These two sentences give the impression that the noise is being made by some sort of machinery or some kind of power tool. Obviously, this isn't true, the noise is being made by metal grinding on metal, which would sound much different than some sort of mechanical equipment. Equipment would be the tools used to build the sculpture, but not the sculpture itself. If it's to suggest that Meredith was thinking that it might possibly be machinery of some kind, then just say that these were Meredith's speculations, rather than give the impression that it is factual that it is some kind of equipment being used.