Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24859608-20140830062858/@comment-24381191-20140904115927

NathanLeachman wrote: May I ask you if you have ever heard of sleep paralysis? If not, then you've come to the right place.

Sleep paralysis is a scientific phenomena, which may occur frequently mistaken for Narclepsy. I do not know how to explain it in a scientific manner, but I am able to explain it in more simple terms.

Let me start off with an example.

You have just woken from a sleep, but your still so tired that you can't move. This is because your REM(Rapid-Eye-Movement, which should only occur while sleeping), is still going after you've awoken. Normally, this issue will resolve itself in a matter of seconds causing you to fall back asleep before you even opened your eyes. When this issue isn't resolved, your body then gets into a loop-hole, causing it to shutdown..Forgetting your still concious.

So for the next set of minutes, your viewing your body going into every little part of your mind in a panic mode, revealing horrifying hallucinations that you can so much as feel. You can't run from these, you can't speak to these, you can't even blink. The only thing you can do is wait it out.



Is this good so far? My revised version?

It's better but there's still a few things, cut off the first paragraph (pastas that start with questions aren't well liked. You also used the wrong your, you're twice. Remember, your=possessive, you're=you are. I'll quote those instances, '  but your still so tired that you can't move. This is because your REM..' and '   your viewing your body' Fix these then post it again in the workshop, and ask an admin to look over it (I'm not sure if it will get deleted or not.) If they give you the all clear, post it onto the wiki.