Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5542146-20181104100644/@comment-36627132-20181104103209

I tried to read through this, but like the last story you ran through Writer's Workshop this one is just too long to be sat through. Next time, try making your story a suitable length.

Also like your last story this one has a lot of spelling issues: unnecessary commas, walls of text, you have different people talking in the same paragraph, and overly dramatic capslocks.

I hope someone has the patience (or for the sake of pun should I say "patients") to sit through this, review it, and hopefully tell the rest of us what it is about.