Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20181013052639/@comment-9041013-20181013105733

Kolpik is back, bay bay Overall, good job. some issues I personally found is Simmons age. How old is this old fuck? 90? I mean he tormented the parents of kids who are supposed to have 35 - 40 year old parents as an old man, so he himself was around his late forties and up when the parents were kids. Seeing as how he has a typical urban lifestyle, his age and relative good health are contributed to his genetics. Make him Jewish or Italian, these are common in America and long lived.

For how long Ricky was around? at first it seemed like it's one years time between the start and Halloween but then it turns into "years" all of the sudden, clarify that.

Other than that I liked it, doesn't need to be altered pretty much. Everything makes sense. The ending is basically worse than first seems, the kid will die I reckon, serves him right though.

It's a very gray line between who's the villain and who's the hero, as both central characters serve both roles. Great job with that type of writing

The realism, again is real. Old men won't call police cause he doesnt know what is troubling him but by the time he does he is close to Halloween and his values kick in which ends up worse than anyone could think.

It'll probably fit the Halloween category :)