User blog comment:Pikapasta13/Why my creepypasta story's are dumb/@comment-36627132-20190505032800

I haven't read all of your stories, but I have read Cyko so I will give you my thoughts on that.

First and foremost it was little else more than a retelling of Jeff the Killer: kid moves to city, gets bullied, goes crazy, ends up in hospital, kills parents, gives themself an unusual appearance, and is somehow never caught.

Second, it had the main character becoming a proxie for Slender Man (who is never even referred to as such, and early on called "spender"). Spinpastas have been blacklisted from this site for a while. Even then it came out of nowhere. You mention at the top of the story the story is how your character became "spenders" (sic) proxy, and then out of the blue the story literally ended with "Slender let me be his proxie". Besides those two mentions, he is nowhere else in the story.

Third, the spelling was pretty bad. There were misspelled words, missing a few letters, spaces before commas instead of after, no punctuation in the dialogue, using actual numbers instead of spelling them out, and awkward wording and grammar.

Fourth the story was pretty thin and felt as if it were rushed through. Very little detail is given throughout it and episodes go pretty quick.

I suggest reading your stuff before posting it and using grammar software. Go over this blog for example. While there is no standard (that I know of) on how good english has to be in blog posts, this one suffers from the problems presented in Cyko.

I also suggest putting your stories through Writer's Workshop so other users can help you with your stories.