Talk:Why My Grandfather Never Told Me His War Stories/@comment-27269874-20151122233715

Do you mind a bit of criticism? I think this is a good start to a story with, as hackneyed as it sounds, a lot of potential!

My main complaint is that many of your sentences are run-on and difficult to read. To fix this, you should probably use more commas to break up the clauses.

Aside from that, I liked it a lot! 8/10!