Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26335047-20150422093732/@comment-26054278-20150427001224

Also, here is a second opinion (from user Dorkpool) that says the good things as well as the bad things:

"However, it has quite a few flaws. For example, it’s littered with purple prose, which makes things unnecessarily confusing and complex. Despite the purple prose, there are still some spelling and grammar errors. However, that’s not surprising considering how long this damn thing is. It’s perfectly fine for a story to be long, as long as its length is warranted. Yeah, the length isn’t warranted in this case, making it a pain in the ass to read and Riff. I should also note that the plot feels cliché. I’m sure it’s been done before, somewhere. Not sure where though.

Despite all that, there are some good things. The main character, despite not knowing her name or gender until the end, isn’t terrible, and actually seems intelligent. The plot, while it probably has been done, doesn’t feel very cliché, and does have some interesting ideas. And while the purple prose can be annoying, it doesn’t really hurt comprehension of the story for the most part. So, all in all, this story isn’t terrible, but it isn’t very good either."