Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-38758389-20190326213507/@comment-35711173-20190327021123

I kind of like the photoshopped game images, but there are so many it looks kind of like you are trying to make points on your profile. A picture should either dress the story up or bring something to the table to explain it. I think some of those could be more effectively done in text.

Respectfully, the story isn't ready for the Wiki. I've had some that I brought to the Writer's Workshop that the kind souls spent time critiquing and I realized "Oh yeah, they're right!" Some of my best work came that way. To me right now, I see far too many spelling and grammar issues. Could it be improved sufficiently to make it ready? I don't know. It definitely needs something to bring it up a couple of notches. I found it rather ordinary and dull.

I know it really sucks when someone calls your story dull. I'm sorry. The story didn't interest me.