Talk:A Story to Read Alone at Night

Good writing. The plot is classically suspenseful; however, unless I missed something I might suggest that one or two of the little nudges and jolts (to both the reader and to Sara's house) lean towards pointless fluff. For instance, why would the person do things specifically to draw Sara's paranoia, like knocking or calling, if his/her "game" hasn't begun yet? The tense is also inconsistent; the first three paragraphs are in past rather than present. Considering the ending, I'd change those to match the rest instead of vice versa. This is an enjoyable pasta. Javer80 03:27, December 26, 2011 (UTC)