Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25313274-20140818011430

Hey guys! This is my second pasta, (my first one got deleted instantly after posting because it had poor quality.) and since my last one got deleted because I only got feedback from one person, and I posted it directly after that, I'll wait a little while before I post it. If you have any advice, I will gladly accept it. This pasta is not done yet, and this is only the first post of it. --- I work at a local police station in Chaska, MN. My monthly job is to go through the case files and organize them and see if there is anything out of place. One day, I was re-organizing the Strange Occurrences section of the storage files and a file fell out of the drawer. I picked it up. The folder said "TOP SECRET- PENTAGONE SIGHTINGS IN TWIN CITIES AREA AND IN NORTHERN MINNESOTA". I thought it looked weird, so I slipped it into my bag while no one was looking. When I got home, I turned on the TV and grabbed the folder. What you are about to read is what is inside of the folder that I found.

PENTAGONE SIGHTINGS IN TWIN CITIES AREA AND NORTHERN MINNESOTA WRITTEN IN 2008

In late 1998-early 2000, northern Minnesota, south-eastern Manitoba and southwestern Ontario experienced a large amount of sightings of a finned creature reported to look similar to a spider but with five legs. Most people who see the creature or take photography of the creature on purpose or on accident either are found dead days after the sighting, or they just go missing and are never found again. This creature has been nicknamed "The Pentagone" because it, of course, has five legs, and anyone who sees it has a very small chance of surviving, so they are "gone". There are, however, a few people who have survived an encounter with the "Pentagone", and have lived to tell their story. Unfortunately, most people who survive either go into hiding, or run away. There have been only 9 interviews, and only 3 have been caught on tape.

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