Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180627165340/@comment-35973449-20180628064713

Well, that post didn't go through. Sigh let me try again. This is a good intellectual piece. However, is it creepy? Um, in my opinion, a little. How could you make it creepier?

Give it a main character. Give them eternal life and then toss them in a bleak pool of nothingness.

No light, no sound, no conversation. No pain, no pleasure. Just existence. Describe it in detail. What's going through the character's mind? Do they regret? Do they wish? Do they scream rant and rave before giving in? Do they talk to themselves for a time? Let it go on and on. See where it takes you.

The next bit is my personal thoughts. I hope I don't offend anyone.

I've died a handful of times. It's never been more than a minute but I've never met a god-like being or saw a vision of euphoria or a dimly lit tunnel. I wasn't supposed to live more than three days after I was born. I've had over thirty surgeries. Still, nothing other worldly has ever happened to me.

Now, I don't pretend to know what happens to us after we die. However, after a time bliss would turn into torture and pain would change into just another experience. No one can experience something over and over and over without it becoming just another every day, every second, every minute experience. Repetition breeds familiarity.

Personally, I don't believe in any higher powers, or different planes of existence, or other world energies. I believe in the here and now. I believe what we do on this earth, no matter what happens after we die, counts. I'm an atheist who isn't afraid to say "I don't know."