Talk:The Story of the Abiteth Twins/@comment-25170312-20150611015849

I don't want to go into uneventful detail - but you did soooo many times.

Not that the particular details mattered, I just figured I would point them out. - and you did soooo many times.

The thought processes of the narrator are unrealistic. If you can't get on board with the main character then any story is going to fail.

Creepy twins are one thing (or two things?), but you threw in too many cliches.