Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24376783-20141228170610/@comment-24376783-20141230041423

Thanks. I did notice that first spelling error you mentioned when rewriting. If finished the rewrite, but I'm going to wait until tomorrow to read through it again. I'll also change the second part. It was a bit awkward. Although, the style of the writing is meant to be a third-person passive narrative. I wanted the reader to be able to know the thoughts running through his mind. It plays a huge part in the whole story. There will be things that don't make sense, or that aren't consistant to previous parts of the story, but they're supposed to be there. It's not supposed to add up, and he's meant to realize this. There's also a point where his thoughts change dramatically. It is obvious when it happens, and if you can catch why it happened and why it was so dramatic it will make sense. Anyways, thanks for all the feedback. I'll try and post it up either tomorrow or Wednesday if I have time.