Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20170204172123/@comment-24101790-20170204183841

MrDupin wrote: Below I list some possible mistakes I found. I'm not good with that style of prose though, so I'm not sure all of them are actual mistakes.

"a brief detailing of events leading up to the interview have been listed" - Shouldn't 'have' be 'has', since it is referring to 'a brief detailing of the events' instead of the events themselves?

"whereabouts of a one Mr. Howard." - Are both the 'a' and 'one' needed?

"an admiration in my brief military history" - Maybe 'for' instead of 'in'?

"followed such a attraction to adventure" - It's 'an' instead of 'a'.

"a large amount mistletoe" - An 'of' is missing before 'mistletoe'.

"while he listened at attention" - I think you meant to write 'with' instead of 'at'.

"ascend without footholds without risk" - The two 'without's are a bit awkward.

"decided that did’t have the means" - Add a 'we' before 'that'.

"had enough men to prepared a makeshift" - The 'to' is not right. Maybe 'and'?

"who wore think clothes and" - I think you meant to write 'thick' instead of 'think'.

"leading us deeper into into the darkness" - Remove one 'into'.

"touch them with out outstretched" - 'with out' should be one word.

"forced to cover out faces" - It's 'our' instead of 'out'.

"Words cannot the abomination" - There is a word missing after 'cannot'. Maybe 'describe'?

"as they grew it volume" - It's 'in' instead of 'it'.

Thanks, I got them. I did use 'at attention' to draw similarities to a soldier, but I realized that since they're walking, it doesn't make much sense. Thanks for catching those.