Talk:The Garage Scene/@comment-25477067-20160222153033

I have to say, the ending was predictable, but only because we were reading this on a horror website. If I hadn't taken the time to think about how I knew the story was going to end, I probably wouldn't have gotten the twist.

The ending was, however, a bit cliched, it felt like JTK with the whole "carving smiles" thing, and I would have liked it more if it had been about his struggle to stay alive after they just left him there, maybe with the camera set on a table across the room or something to film his struggles. Sort of a "Gerald's Game" Scenario.

Very well written, the characters seemed believable for the most part. One thing though is that his friends tension never really comes out in the story before the final scene where he is reflecting, so I would have liked to see a build up, with them ignoring him, or cutting him out before the sudden last minute heel-turn. Before they tied him up, they all seemed like best friends. Then they suddenly turn evil? Michael and Mark could use a little more action in the back half, they basically just stand around watching all of this go down.

By the way, no one would think "Oh, I'm going to murder someone, let's wear a cup" They might think of gloves, but that's about it. There is no way they were that smart about it. Besides, it might be interesting to see what would happen if they actually got mad, and "broke character" on camera. Maybe Michael and Mark kill him for it, as he pleads for forgiveness.

Small grammar error: "Your lips are concealed" is a bulky and awkward term to use. It sounds like they hid his lips under the couch or something. A better term would be "covered" or to say "Oh wait, you can't."