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That's fair. The prose issue is something I was considering as well. I think my first edit will include changing the dialogue to reflect a younger narrator, maybe 9 or 10 years old. I kind of got to that by the end, but not so much earlier on.

Unfortunately, with a story this short horror is hard to come by. It brings up the issue of showing, not telling, and I'd rather leave it vague if I can. I could definitely work some more details in there, but I don't want to tell too much.