Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24965033-20140720234702/@comment-25148755-20140721013007

Personally, I'd switch the whole thing to present tense (I'll let Zigg go through it for the various other grammar edits) Reason I say this is purely because of the ending. Using the past tense like you are means that you are posting it after the events of the story rather than present which could be the reader having purview to your thoughts as they happen. This becomes questionable since you are obstensibly killed/maimed/whatever at the end.

Scarecrow bears are original and oddly specific...just curious if this story was based on actual childhood fears.

"We are the Aesthetic Ones." This last line isn't particularly scary and the whole concept of the monster revealing their name at the end is overdone to the point of being cliche.