Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24810508-20150526041100

I entered the quiet room and noticed a black-haired doll wearing a blue dress. As I traveled my eyes from bottom to top, its feet slowly swung, my eyes glanced at the dust on the torso, and the neck revealed a noose attached to a rope connected to the ceiling.

Yes, it's a micropasta...I was going to use this concept for a larger creepypasta, but it seems like if I write a creepypasta for too long, it turns into crap. So, I experimented with a micropasta instead. This is actually my first micropasta, to be honest. Well, I need reviews to help me, is this derp or not? 