Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24315706-20150526084650/@comment-26399604-20150531022615

I have to agree with Senjumaru. The story sounds good, but it needs a little more to it to expand on "the surgeon's" motives. I think you could add more to it while still keeping it as a micropasta, hopefully solving the conflict you mentioned. I think you could do it easily by maybe describing what "you" as the main character sees. Maybe the visuals around could explain what the surgeon does after he's done with his victims or maybe the character could recall events in the media about similar disappearances. There are many approaches to this if you really take the time to think it out. Other than that, I actually like where it's going and I hope this helps!