Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37123481-20181102131658/@comment-36627132-20181102133615

Spelling and Grammar Issues: The format is off, there does not have to be four spacebar strokes at the beginning of each paragraph. A lot of words are unnecessarily bolded. You misspelled "superstitious" (you spelled it "superticious"). "Let's this 'prayer' session didn't go as it normally did." you forgot to add "say" after "Let's". "There was this guy" would sound more professional if you said "There was a man". "he was stuck in bed for more than 2 years", it looks more professional if you spell out the number unless you are talking about money or years. "and drove off, to the apartment" the comma is unnecessary. In dailogue you have a bad habit of putting a quotation mark at the end of the preceeding narrative word and adding a space after the quotation mark (example: Example" Example.") You misspelled church "chucrch" near the end.

Plot Issues: You start your story off by trying to tell the reader that this really happened, which is not only obviously not true, but is also cliche. Then your narrator doesn't even remember exactly how old she was when she had this horrifying experience. The plot of the story itself isn't very exciting and is anticlimactic. That last line about beating the previously-unnamed Isaiah makes it look like a joke.

I'm not exactly sure if this story can be saved, but if it can it would require A LOT of work.