Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-14631740-20151010081824/@comment-24101790-20151010115207

We no longer accept pokepastas. I believe the Spinpasta wiki still accepts these stories, but before posting there, I would work out some of the issues. There were grammatical issues it's=it is, its=possession. As well as details that don't factor in to the story: "He had a cigarette in his hand, and the many years of smoking had now begun to show their effect."

Additionally the premise has quite a few plot holes. Species couldn't spread out and become so common that they could be found everywhere in the span of someone's lifetime. The idea that a doctor could modify the genes and create how many pokemen there currently are is extremely implausible. I'm sorry, but this feels pretty rushed and is really lacking in description/an involving plot.