Talk:Dear Mrs. Chalmers/@comment-25471033-20180808210821

This was a neat little pasta, the format was really cool, I don't know of many, if any, decent pastas in a letter format. The concept is terrifying, imagine finding out that your missing little boy is now growing up, and enjoying, being a serial killer? The description was also really cool, I liked how you used not too much describers to take away from the actual story, but it still painted a picture perfect image. The only problem I had was with the first sentence in the fifth paragraph. "Once I finished her up, I picked her up" is kind of redundant, maybe change it slightly to "Once i finished, I picked her up" or maybe just take out "I picked her up", as you already have your action of chucking her into the dumpster.

However, minus this, it didn't take away from the creepypasta at all! 9/10