Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190511230855/@comment-9041013-20190512115338

This would've been fine if the kid got caught in Shelter's trap any other way. I mean, it doesn't make much sense that a kid who lived on the streets for a while and probably got toughened up and somewhat suspecious of people randomly trusts a dude who makes him feel uncomfortable just because of promises that sound a little too sweet.

It's like you had to have this point to make the story work, which for me ruins the whole thing.