Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5726907-20160912095508/@comment-5726907-20160913052553

There we go, below I have posted a link to a rewrite. I'm glad that you understand this is abstract horror, it doesn't really have a point. I enjoy abstract horror and really wanted to try something that really didn't have a central aim, but was more just an almost random sequence of events. Rereading it, it feels rushed. I tried expanding it and reducing the repetition, hopefully making it more sufficient.

http://pastebin.com/qPDg5iLp

Thank you for taking the time to work with me :)