Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27582895-20170201044223/@comment-24101790-20170201045439

No real explanation, very little content here. In fact, I'm wondering if you may have accidentally posted this early without actually including the rest of the story as this seems more like an initial premise without any reason why the inner monologue matters to the audience or why they should be invested in the story itself when there isn't any real plot progression (kid debates suicide, does it). It doesn't even really have much dialogue going between the two ideations that decide Johnny's fate one way or another. All in all, pretty poor storytelling.