Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160707143147/@comment-25569708-20160711195938

So the new additions look good to me, there are a few errors though:

"the reptiles reaction to a humans presence" should be "the reptile's reaction to a human's presence".

"it's fangs penetrating" should be "its fangs penetrating".

"its fallen foes legs" should be "its fallen foe's legs".

"It showed no agression" should be "It showed no aggression".

And "It ensured that my plans and preparations were accurate; just to ensure perfection in this kill" uses "ensure" too much.

But yeah other than that it looks like you were able to explain yourself a little better, make the whole thing seem more plausible, bettered your wording, improved structure, and generally described the whole thing better. I like the new lines "I think I knew more about them than their own family and friends did" and "It showed no agression towards me whatsoever, as if we were two killers who held a mutual respect for each other - each of us defying our nature for the greater good". I also appreciated how you explained where the creatures came from and how the killer was camouflaged; these details made the story that much more realistic. You didn't seem to add any fluff anywhere, so good job on that.

That's not much else I can think to say; the new stuff is pretty solid in my opinion. Nice job.