Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25919746-20141225000913/@comment-24101790-20141225020300

First off, your story needs to be broken up. Do not post your story entirely in one paragraph. It is hard to read and tend to result in people re-reading lines.

Your story is additionally missing periods, commas, quotations (when using dialogue), apostrophes from words indicating possession and contractions. "dog(')s blood"

There are a lot of of wording errors here as well. "As i (I) walked down the stairs to see me (my) dog i (I) saw the creature! I'd (It)..." Additionally the plot feels really rushed. You introduce the creature right off the bat and for-go character development or plot build-up. I'm sorry, but this story isn't up to quality standards and needs a lot of revision and the plot needs to be fleshed out as it currently seems generic and rushed.