Talk:They've Changed/@comment-25052433-20160419031118

Excellent story as always. The twist was well executed, and the way you presented it was very brilliant. I knew something was wrong with the girl, and as I read, I went through different theories, but in truth, the ending still took me by surprise. You opened this story with a soft enough start, creating a perfectly mundane image of a young woman who perhaps did something on spring break that upset her conservative parents. Then using the holy water as the poison concept was fantastic, and honestly I never would have thought holy water in your description of the substance. The ending brought it all together, with her sudden shift creating a sharp element of suspesnse and mystery, a stark contrast to the ongoing monologue from the character's point of view.

This was a great story written in your outstanding style and was an enjoyable read from start to finish.