Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24150179-20150608225639/@comment-24150179-20150612203352

Thank you so much for taking the time to give me feedback about my pasta. I'm not that good with tense consistency so I didn't even realize the mistakes I made while typing/reading. Also, yeah adding more about the Greens and the video would make it better. I should've spent some more time on things like these. The ending is pretty cliché now that I think about it. I'll definitely try to make a more original end. Also I agree that some of the short statements should be fixed or combined. I sort of wrote those in after reading it and adding some additional info.Your response really helped me a lot! Thanks again.