Talk:A Girl and Her Imp/@comment-25091096-20140625062308

This was awesome. The characterization is especially what was on point. Kyra's innocence is very believable, particularly in making up the name "Bobinson-boolay".

The diction that you used for Bobinson-boolay really shows how original you've made this pasta to be. Nice to see you've made his speaking mannerisms unique instead of general. It's going to be a while before I forget a voice like his.

Nice strategy you did there with the dad: Talk about him in the beginning with no sense of suspicion and then, bring him back at the end only to bring a nice twist.

The story goes at a nice pace and never loses my attention. I don't really have any suggestions to give other than one:

"the cat was longer there" ---I'm pretty sure you meant to put a "no" there, but there's nothing a quick edit can't fix.

Besides that, this is prime work, man.