Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140827081253/@comment-25037895-20140827091509

[It's disturbing to witness. I mean, how many times has it happened to me? How many people have I recognized only for them to be unrecognizable seconds later? It was an unsettling mystery I had to investigate.] -- That paragraph is just golden.

[I watched on although] -- Add a comma after "on" in this sentence.

[between to avoid] -- Another comma after "between."

The sentence fragments after ellipses should start with an un-capitalized letter.

Really great story. Not a thing missing, as far as description.