Talk:The Santa at the Mall/@comment-27905100-20161216012257/@comment-4849011-20161217001042

I appreciate the interaction with readers, and as for the multiple edits, hey, it happens to all of us.

As with Vroom's story, I think you did a good job setting the scene (not just the physical appearance, but also showing Sarah as a caring mother) and I enjoyed the descriptions (such as Sammy's happy face resembling an emoticon, the crunching underfoot as they approached Santa's throne, and the descriptions of the footsteps in the endings). I also liked the foreshadowing, such as Sarah not wanting to think of Sammy's future, and the coldness of the husband's hand in the alternate ending. Speaking of which, I preferred the alternate ending, but I'm glad you included both so readers could pick which one they wanted. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest!