User talk:Skyres164

Story
Your story was deleted for a number of reasons. It has a small number of punctuation, spelling, and grammatical issues, but they weren't really severe enough to warrant a deletion. Although the wording errors were more noticeable. ("..the weather was rainy, cold and gray, and I sleepy.", "...and I felt it, when, in an instant, he stabbed me in the other.", "Pirate movies are Illegal, ...", "my father was trying to wake me up after seeing the mess the room and seeing me lying on the table in the living room", etc. )

The story does have a very similar feel to "lost episode" pastas which are no longer accepted on this wiki in that a person buys a cheap dvd/game and then finds out it is cursed/haunted/jinxed. The "It was all a dream" ending did no service to the story/tension. (This is known as the "Saint Elsewhere" ending and it has not garnered fans...) Additionally I assumed the boy mentioned in the video was you, but you shifted it to first person with no explanation. These were some of the reasons why I decided to delete your story. I would suggest going to the writer's workshop for more in-depth feedback.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:01, July 5, 2014 (UTC)