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Nomination for PotM does not automatically make a pasta qualitative.

The story was anti-climactic and generic. I find it unlikely a kidnapping could happen and the clown who sings a song that goes "we really love each other" and telling the kids to stay silent about the kidnapping is not apprehended.

The mother who ignores the child who is afraid of the other children is seemingly the perfect character for that time in the story, and this is not something that a mother would do.

The entertainer who sings a creepy song is a cliche, and it's not particularly well implemented in this story. It's hard to read at times.

For the next story shares the same theme song as the previous story, which is overly-descriptive and hard to read. It's kind of grating actually. Since the child was already scared to watch the video, this seems anti-climactic and also falls into another cliche. There's no way he's going to keep watching if he is so scared, and if he does, why? There's a missed opportunity to come up with something that is more plausible and climactic. The character development is flawed also, the main character is blindly subjecting himself to brainwash.

Why is Mr Piggyton so evil? He seems to exist only to further the plot, which seems anti-climactic, and one-dimensional, it is hard to get invested in any of the characters.