Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37855860-20181222181108

Hey I'm new to this and I was wondering if I could get opinion(s) on this draft prologue for a creepypasta I'm working on. Open to all criticism and asking what thoughts pop into your head. Look forward to hearing from anyone :)    - Silversiskin

 Horror Chicken 

A Modern Creepypasta Story

Man's best friend, or foe.

Time will pass and pay it's toll.

"He won't lie!" "He is my best friend!" "He will never abandon me!"

Yes He Will        He Will Kill You            He Will Leave You For Dead

Time                             Will                                          Pass

Pay                                   It's                                                Toll

Does                               He                                                 Love

Built                                To                                                 Kill and

Kill                               He                                                  Shall 