Talk:Running Out of Tombstones/@comment-25941663-20170210190851

You used the word 'spastically' twice. Since this is a word not often seen, I would suggest changing one occassion to something different, as currently it stands out.

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I liked how you handled Ronnie Blakely in particular. First you drew as in, increasing the suspense from Jax getting caught, then the realization came that the kid would get killed, and then a clever confirmation of what everyone had in their head. Very nice work indeed.

You capped off this scene fittingly with a brutal finish. A great climax to a great scene. Bravo.

In general, this was very well written with a nice pace. It kept me guessing, and even after I finished it I have some little doubts at what I saw was real. I had (and still have) a feeling that there is no monster at all. It's all in Jax's mind. There is no monster. He just kicks bodies into the pit, and that's where the putrid smell comes from.

The fact that I'm thinking about this even after the story is over is very positive. One of my favourites. Well done sir, I'm looking forward to your next story.