Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25825682-20150315062046

I already had reviews positive/negative and this version seems the most promising.I made resent changes since my last review and have waited three days for another. I know it's long so the whole thing doesn't have to be read. I do need two questions answered though before, so I can finish the shorter second half before I head back to school.

Story in writer workshop Terror Beneath 14,000+ words. 