Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20190702100724/@comment-9041013-20190702144956

The rhythm doesn't exactly flow to me, it's like each stanza works on it's own.

Your repetition of a word for the sake of sparing a rhyme kind of irked me and the stanza with the catacombs felt kind of awkward.

The theme is alright though I kind of figured it out half way through.

Just my personal opinion.