User blog comment:EmpyrealInvective/So You Want to Write a Journal Entry Pasta?/@comment-28428152-20170326165208

After reading this, I started wondering about a story of mine that has been up for a few years, The Journal of Sullivan Jones. It wasn't ever deleted, but the part about not spoon-feeding information to the reader made me wonder if this is what is wrong with my story, because even after rewriting the story a few months ago with better diction and a more fleshed out plot, something about it doesn't feel right to me, but I just can't figure out what it is. I mean, I really like the plot of it and the concept, it's just something about the execution that doesn't sit quite right with me. Do you think you could just take a look and give me some info? I would try the Writer's Workshop, but nobody ever comments on any of my posts so it's become a bit useless to me personally, and honestly frustrating. Oh, and the reason I spoon-feed information to the reader is because I based the character on myself, and how I've written actual journal entries before, and I actually do kind of spoon-feed information in real life, though that may just be because that's what I'm used to having to do when writing a story. Thanks :)

Banned In CP (Hail Satan 666) (talk) 16:52, March 26, 2017 (UTC)