Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39380631-20190507154743/@comment-39380631-20190509135254

BloodySpghetti wrote: Well I read it on the main site, the whole roommate angle was random and didn't do much. Could've just switched it for a cat, or the neighbors being noisy. It literally didn't do anything when you wrote "He never had a roommate" after the monster ate the guy.

Also, the way you wrote this prevents me from caring about Jon, because you introduce him as a statistic rather than a person; "there was an author, the author was doing stuff, the author" it's like it's an author defined by being an author rather than a full fledged actual living person. That's fair. I didn't mean the make the author relatable, which made it dumb to have him be the center of the story. The creature was meant to be the interesting one, to leave a bit of mystery in the air by making the beady eyes visible in the woods. As for the roommate, that part was also dumb. I'll be changing that to a cat, so it actually makes sense. Thank you for the feedback!