Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26373030-20150515201108/@comment-24450775-20150515215856

Thoughts are usually put in italics. Not a rule or anything, just how it's normally done. I would change the like about the bottle of blood to say Dr V arranged for the patient to receive it rather then give it to him. If someone gave me a bottle of wine, which turned out to be blood, my first suspicions would be aimed at the giver. Now if this was a first person narrative from the POV of the patient, you could get away with this as is. If that makes sense.

Other than those small notes, I have nothing to offer. This is well written, and decently paced. I have nothing really corrective to say about it. 10/10