Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-43858604-20190918224749/@comment-35711173-20190919052518

Note in the first paragraph.

I have spent all my life in Burningham ... for Burningham Airlines Flight 1357...

This sounds trivial, but I don't know of a city or a town named Burningham. Making Burningham be so important that it not only is a city but an airline that nobody has heard of it is distracting.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Oceanic_Airlines

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Independent_Studio_Services#Fictional_brands

https://gunaxin.com/twenty-five-favorite-fake-movie-brands