Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-40058099-20190707221219/@comment-35711173-20190708001910

I think you can get away with this draft, but you can do far, far more.

I have no feel for what this is or where it came from. By the rules, we should have a feel for what it is and why we should be horrified of it. It should grow as we read through it, and by the end we should feel a size and shape and really concrete reason that we would be terrified of an invasion of these things.

I think you should also give us a couple of clues to indicate where it is from. "Greetings, Inhabitants of Earth" and "Traveled for a long time" or some such.