Talk:Abandoned by Disney

Very well done, I enjoyed the slow build to the finish. Only complaint: needs more pics. Not of the end- that negative Mickey is perfect- just of a gate or something. That would help to set it off at the beginning a bit more. Very satisfying creepy pasta. TDKMC1 (talk) 04:09, January 2, 2013 (UTC)

I actually liked this one. Good job! Shinigami.Eyes (talk) 06:14, December 9, 2012 (UTC)

This. This all the way. Tycholarfero (talk) 22:55, December 13, 2012 (UTC)

H-hoooooly CRAAP!! That was creepy as hell! Right before my review, I'm just going to say that this deserves an 11/10. Oh yes. The suspense of the story was just...wow. It really brought you into it. The grounds seem like they're just ruins, but as the plot progresses, there is something sinister inside, something not of this world, and something certainly not Disney-like. The python bit was really creepy, too. Add up all the little details, such as the voices the narrator hears in the room, and the running electricity/water in a place that should have no electricity or water, and you have yourself a very creeped-out reader. And all that suspense eventually leads up to an ending that's

1. Not a shock ending (eg. something TOTALLY OUT OF THE PLOT)

2. Not predictable (eg. the narrator was a ghost)

3. Abso-fucking-lutely GORGEOUS.

I was literally shaking as the Mickey Mouse costume got up. It just summed everything right up. That the place was not of this world. And, adding to all of that, beautiful, just beautiful, narration that drags you in. Of course, there are a few minor issues: when I started reading the pasta, I thought it'd just be another cliche detail pasta of a place. And 'ABANDONED BY GOD'? Anyways, great, great job. Superb. *licks lips* FRAAANK!!! 07:46, December 17, 2012 (UTC)

Oh man, this was some GOOD pasta, seriously. The initial exposition is long without getting boring, the descriptions are flawless and the suspense just draws you in. Only thing I think could've been done better was the last writing on the way out. "ABANDONED BY DISNEY" again would simply terrify me, and it's just more fitting.

Even then, 10/10 would read for the first time again if possible Dusk Izanagi (talk) 04:54, December 20, 2012 (UTC)#

Loved it. Very creepy pasta. MeltingObject (talk) 15:46, December 31, 2012 (UTC)

PotM for January (hopefully). Loved this pasta. 10/10 17:09, December 31, 2012 (UTC)

This shouldnt be Pasta of the Month.

This should be Pasta of the YEAR.

Yea I know I should've said this yesterday... Jpkurihara (talk) 01:21, January 2, 2013 (UTC)

This, sir, is the perfect definition for what is wonderful Creepypasta. I wanted to hear more at every little turn. This should be narrated on youtube! Serpentaxy400 (talk) 05:48, January 2, 2013 (UTC)

More from Slimebeast
This was one of several stories Slimebeast (Chris Wolf) wrote in just the past two months, most of them for the pasta writing contest on Bogleech. You can read all contest entries here, but others by Chris Wolf are as follows:

Click Reload

Funnymouth

A Flash of Blue

Ex

Afterpeople

Watch for Willy

Whimsy Wood

He Does Birthdays

ALL of these are gold. You could say he's totally new to the "scene" but as soon as he started posting stories I knew people would love his narration and concepts. Some people are lucky if they churn out half this many good stories in a year, but he did these in like, eight weeks...and a few others, too, currently on the site forums and a couple more already on the wiki here. (Perfectly Normal Eric is another one)

Bogleech (talk) 09:57, January 2, 2013 (UTC)