Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26926430-20150825131056/@comment-26934150-20150827204800

While the premise of a haunted teddy bear may be somewhere on the border between cliché and underused, the lack of proper puntuation and overall poor grammar of the story takes away almost all of the "creepy" factor. If you want me to, I can help you fix up the grammar, but I am going to need you to first probably write some background history for the main character and his teddy bear - where did you get it? Why is it hunting you? If, as you suggest, the teddy bear has hunted you before, how did you survive that?

A large part of the creepy factor also comes from the unknown - you leave little unknown as you describe in accurate detail what is hunting you and how it is hunting you. Perhaps this could be a recurring nightmare, where the teddy bear always ends up killing you, but you one day manage to escape? After you wake up, the teddy bear could have had an eye fall out, or something similar - perhaps look more and more menacing as it realizes you are trying to flee from its grip.

Experiment with the ideas!