Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180930033305/@comment-9041013-20180930103833

DrBobSmith wrote: Bloody Spaghetti,

I have been freezing cold in the high desert snow in the USA. I do mean FREEZING.

What's a Berlingo?

"Making sure there were no cars in sight, David took one of his hands off the wheel and looked at his watch, it showed a quarter to Eight P.M" What are the rules with capitalizing times? Would 7:45 PM be clearer and shorter?

"through the speakers of his vehicular stereo." The word Vehicular sounds strange here. Suggest "from his car's stereo." Speakers are implicit. Let me guess, you were in the middle of the desert, where no concrete is found. At winter. I am not sure about the geological phenomenon behind it but I've heard that concrete actually traps heat making urban areas hotter at night than those that are either rural or completely devoid of humans. That's besides the point however.

A Berlingo is a model of the Citroen brand.

To be honest, I like my fancy language, but you do seem to be doing a lot of nitpicking lately, sir.