Talk:The Polished Man/@comment-25428589-20150111105704

I really enjoyed this pasta. At times, I was worried that it would become extremely clichéd and ruin itself, but I feel that you pulled off elements which some might consider overused very well.

For example, the "narrator is a killer" concept is something that many consider cliché, especially when we only find out at the end, but you executed it very well. You didn't make the character impossible to sympathise with, you gave him some human attributes which allowed me to fully engage with the action and become concerned for him when he was in danger.

The twist at the end made sense to me, and there were clues in the pasta towards it. I, unfortunately, didn't predict it, but unlike some pastas, there was the possibility that the twist could happen, I was just to stupid to notice.

I am also extremely glad that you didn't kill off the narrator in the duration of the story. A lot of new pastas have the narrator describe their own demise, which doesn't make any sense, whereas you only had the narrator plan it and left the pasta on an ambiguous note. However, this also kind of confused me. Maybe you could talk about how the narrator was recording himself saying all this. Was it a diary? A video? I know that at one point you talked about recording something, maybe you could make this slightly more clear.

One thing that seems really off to me was the behaviour of the polished man. Why is he watching the narrator before the narrator even finds out that he has inherited the house. I thought the polished man would only attack those who owned the house. If not, why did he target the narrator specifically, or the family in the past? Please clarify this.

Grammar wise, I saw a variety of what I believe to be typos, which I will be happy to fix a bit later. If you'd like, I can give you a more in depth description on this, but for now I would recommend researching the use of "their", "there" and "they're" and "it's" and "its".

Since you've brought up the dividers, I'll fix them, as there is currently a formatting error in how they are displayed.

Overall, I would give this pasta 87%. I enjoyed the premise and really loved the way you quickly switched the hunter-hunted point of views around at the end. You need to clarify why the polished man targets specific people and explain how the narrator recorded this.