Talk:In the Bayou/@comment-5733573-20180530035437

I really enjoyed this story. The narrator's voice is highly relatable, right down to his paranoia and self-soothing mechanism. Also, the encounter with the monster is truly unnerving. The criticism I would give here is that there are quite a few examples of redundancy. For instance, how is it different for something to in one's mind and in one's thoughts? Are those not the same thing? That's just one of several examples. So this could use some cleaning up, but it was a lot of fun to read.