Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5012317-20140411035334/@comment-9967354-20140518112924

As a haunted book/Cursed object pasta, this was cliche. For one, the person at the bookstore did not recognize it, then strange things started happening, then there was blood everywhere, and I dunno how the writer's writing if she(he?) burned down. If five people were dead, wouldn't the police investigate and find out where they were they had been the previous day? Wouldn't the narrator be interrogated? (pardon me, I've read too many murder mysteries for my own good) If she(he?) had a dinner party, he'd know who came and who didn't, so (s)he'd know the five people on the news -unless the news didn't mention their names. Even so, the narrator seemed annoyingly like a person from a horror movie who finds out that shit is going down, and it's because of the cursed book, and barely does anything about it. Don't make your character suicidal, it's not very becoming.

Lastly, if I told you to cut every cliche bit of the story, you'd have to rewrite it. I'm sorry, but it's true. The only thing that kept this from being the script of an old horror movie is the exorcism at the end.