Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25196212-20140723003632/@comment-4750363-20140723171706

To be honest if you think the criticism people has said are insults, then I'm afraid you don't have any idea of what an insult is. And what's more: two people. You started being dramatic for two people's criticism.

Leaving that aside, this thread has turned into practically a place where you say over and over that you can't do anything right, instead of working on the story as you are supposed to be doing. I do realize that you just posted an updated version, but it's better if you try to focus on working on the story than expressing how down you feel about receiving criticism.

Now about the new version...Hmmmmm...I think it'd be a good idea to have some sort of link to the former version, so one can see the changes. If you odn't have the old text saved, I could provide it to you.

For now I'll point that the last line, the 'is coming for you', is a sure way to repel a lot of readers. It's a line that has been seen a thousand times, and nobody will be impressed with it. I suggest removing that line.

As soon as I'm back I'll look deeper into the updated version.