Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20181104232254/@comment-37430001-20181108011257

I'd like to say more, but I'll just make this short and sweet as most of it has been said up above. The beginning two paragraphs would have developed into something good if only your point of view (perspective) had not changed back and forth with no warning what-so-ever. I'd suggest sticking to one point of view and only changing after a major event has taken place if at all. Even then, I wouldn't throw the reader into it if they by no means were made aware that they were with them (you). In doing so, interest is lost and the reader spends more time trying to figure out who's who, what's going on, and rereading it just to make sense of it instead of just enjoying the story with an occasional head turner or so. Just some tips for future reference.