Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180905233106/@comment-34823985-20180906074502

This is quite good. Your message never strays. War is not a plague upon Humanity. Nope, it's a tool. :) You may have already done this, but I recommend reading it out loud to test the rhythm.

It is not my fault, your world of smog Your lungs it fills, your oceans clogs And eats away like rabid dogs But the blame lies not with me

I'm just nitpicking, but I would make clogs and dogs singular and put an 'a' in the third line. -like a rabid dog-

It's not necessary, but It might be interesting to see if you can come up with a couple more lines for the end. Just flip your rhyme scheme- 3 lines rhyming with 'me' and the fourth deviating.