Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20180414090245/@comment-10502460-20180415011313

Kolpik wrote: Most kids of six still think a chimney is an access point for Santa, so I don't have any issues with Timmy's only slight reluctance to interact with monsters in his television. He's more worried about getting in trouble with his parents than anything else; makes sense to me.

I like how the monsters hide in his room instead of jumping out the window, or another exit. They hide in exactly the places a six year old expects monsters to be hiding. I am curious to know if they looked any different, other than their size, once they were out of the television.

I also wonder if they are still in Timmy's room, but leaving that open to the imagination of the reader is fine. I speculate that maybe since they could travel through a television then maybe they can travel in a similar way from one child's bedroom to another. Your story has stirred up some curious thoughts in my head, so I didn't find it boring at all.

Why did he turn out the lights to search his room for the monsters? Is that a typo or am I missing something? Also, was he home alone at the age of six? Lastly, I do think Timmy's mom was a bit too precise about when the show was canceled.

Although I didn't really find the story creepy/scary, I think this fits on the site, because it reminds me of the contrasts between what scared me at that age and what scares me now. Hope to read it in it's final form on the site soon.

While you're right about the fact that 6 year olds are still subject to magical thinking and therefore there's no way to know they would react to such a situation, BloodySpghetti may still have a point about the age. After all, age 5 is supposed to be the age when kids start to develop concrete reasoning skills and a basic physical worldview, and in my case I had already figured out on my own that Santa wasn't real by age six, so it might work better if I lowered the age of the kid a bit.

And yeah, I meant to say Timmy turned the lights on to look for them.