Talk:Twenty/@comment-24077689-20141007182230

I was ready to review this, but I can't. It's good, it's very good, while it's not the best thing every it's a solid story, it's haunting, it's well-paced. The only thing I have to note, though, is that you say "my body is emancipated"; you surely mean "my body is emeciated". Other than that, I noticed no major grammatical or spelling errors.

The ending is just my style. It's tragic. This story is lovely, the description of the eyes, how he uses them, it's not simply that he's lost his mind in the isolation, that story's been done to death. He uses the eyes as a sort of comfort, almost as a companion, very well done. I'm not sure I understand what the signifigance of the number thirteen was, though.