Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26268104-20160224201207/@comment-24101790-20160224201651

I'm sorry, but this comes off as a fairly generic Mirror-pasta premise that really has been re-hased too many times to have the impact it once had. The protagonist does one thing, mirror does another, end story.

This really needs more fleshing out to be effective, but the large issue is that it's been covered quite a number of times before and there really isn't much to involve the audience or have an impact on them. Here's a guide on micro pastas to help you out some.