Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25975226-20150401085748/@comment-26027963-20150402180440

Also, there some inconsistencies in your story. It said, at the beginning, that she had been down there for three weeks, but later, it says that she hasn't aten or showered in "Seven days" does she have a shower down there? Plus, not eating in seven days would cause much more then hunger pangs, it would cause constant constipation, extreme skinniness, and loss of muscle and fat. It wouldn't cause stomach growling, because that is the sound of your body digesting not hunger. Thank you for your time, and your story. -CrazyWords