Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24987453-20150120221923/@comment-26037362-20150124041929

I really like the twist in the end, but I would appreciate more detail. It also seems a bit peculiar to me that the story was so abrupt. It all just went a little fast. With a few more details and a more pragmatic dialogue, I think this story could be cool. Good luck to you, mate! -Marzia :3