Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25569708-20150628044653/@comment-26366908-20150702021405

Just one note about the ending: Your lead character became terrified of watching TV because of seeing a 30ft arm? That's the same as saying "I'll never go see another movie at the cinema because I watched the Fantastic Four". Why was this so terrifying? Seeing a little blood-soaked monster walk out and rip the policeman to shreds would be terrifying and harder to explain away as just a practical movie effect. You need to do a better job of portraying your sense of horror as being due to a Lovecraftian sanity check situation. Was it so real and bizarre that you felt the arm reaching out to grab your mind? As it reads at this point there's no real reason for the main character to be that terrified