Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26027963-20150504131223/@comment-5632489-20150504150527

I don't usually emphasize on grammar issues, but since this is so short I will here:

1: "Wether" should be "whether", in all instances.

2: "There for" = "Therefore" (grammatically recognized as one word)

As for the story itself, it seems a bit random. The "big reveal" at the end, due to lack of any build up or indication, seems more funny than anything else. It also doesn't make much sense. He collects "lives"? How can he collect an abstract noun? I'd imagine it would make more sense if he collected bodies or heads. That would sound a little more cliche, I guess, but at least it makes more sense.

I'm not an expert on micropastas, but I'd work on this a bit. Mainly, give us some more indication that something is wrong with the protagonist, rather than just propelling us into his insanity with that final line.