Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24694408-20140324165203/@comment-17118109-20140325185656

It could've been a little clearer, but it was still rather chilling. A few things I noticed: 1. When you say knocking downstairs, it sounds like someone's knocking at the door. 2. In the beginning you overuse the word "scout." 3. You should probably explain some more about it, like maybe he finds out what "rejected" means. Vagueness is good, but this was a little too vague.

Other than that, I liked the story. 7.5/10.