Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25226524-20141006023230/@comment-25226524-20141006054354

Thank you so much for reading it, and giving your opinion. I actually changed that "there" to "their" probably while you were reading it (still, thanks for pointing it out). I notice a little something every time I reread it. I'm so glad you liked it, and I will definitely take the advice on adding a little emotion and scene description here and there. Thanks again for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate it.