User blog:Demon's Mistress/Smiel Ideas

Hey anyone in life right now!! could you help me with my story? I would love to make it better but.... I'm just not to sure how! I don't have a lot of people who really like this kind of story. At least not like you guy's! So please, take a look and just, help me out a little bit, I'm begging and, asking for help......an, I hate asking for help. But, for real I need your guy's option on it. Thank you for everything -Demon's Mistress