Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26416562-20150529073045/@comment-25941663-20150529115029

I fixed the formatting and font color. I won't do it again, I warn you. I mean, it isn't that hard to see that a story is unreadable.

Apart from that, every time a new speaker is talking, you should write it in a new paragraph. Also, punctuation goes inside the quotation marks in dialogue. When a dialogue piece ends with a period but the sentence continues after that, you should replace the period with a comma. Examples:

"Hi" he said. ->Wrong "Hi." he said. -> Still Wrong "Hi," he said. -> Correct

You really should read a bit more on how dialogue is written. A quick google search wouldn't heard. Here's a link I found: link