Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25246639-20140808172024/@comment-24918243-20140808181216

I think this is more like a tour guide then a story.

While some of the stories are indeed interesting, I feel it would work best if you developed each one separately in more detail. It would make them more interesting and get you a lot more mileage.

There are a quite a few grammar errors, so I would suggest you proof it very carefully, and if possible have someone else take a look at it. Below are a few examples:

"If you ever by chance decide to go and visit good old Wisconsin. Might I suggested you visit a little town known as (Portage.)" This should be one sentence and I don't understand why you put the name in brackets. I would write is like this:

"If you ever by chance decide to go and visit good old Wisconsin, may I suggest that you visit a little town called as Portage."

"While, there are many myths while the town is cursed, the one that really is famous is the white ghost curse." / "While there are many myths about the town being cursed, the one that really stands out is the White Ghost Curse."

" It goes that a woman in cemetery road was killed, hung and before her death she cursed the whole town or portage swearing that all will suffer."/ "In this story a woman was hung on Cemetery Road and before she died she cursed the whole town."

Those are just the first 3 sentences. So I would definitely go over it a few times, read it out loud and if possible see if someone else can go over it with you.

Once again, you have enough interesting stuff here for at least 3 pastas, so don't burn it all in one shot.