Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24859608-20140505145720

Here is my creepypasta, it is my first, so it may be crappy, that's why I am willing to critisism. Although, the story isn't true, the basis is based of off a true legend  of Anne. The most infamous ghost in the town of Savannah, Georgia(The State, not the country). Also, the Ouijia Board part was true as well.

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 As a kid, my mom and dad had always traveled. Doing car sales leaving a relative to watch me and my 5 other siblings. I, was right in the middle. Two were younger than me, two were older. Either way, we all missed our parents. Luckily, they could be here one night before they left again.



That night, before my parents left for there buisness trip, I asked them “Why are you going to Savannah, if your not doing car sales there?”. My mom said “We are checking out some of the haunted sites”.

 “So Ghosts are rea....?” I replied....Which is where my dad cut off, thinking I was scared of ghosts. Really, I was just interested in them.



“Only if you believe in them” He said.

Fooling them, I explained how I didn't believe, and how I wanted to go. So that they didn't think I was scared. They agreed, as long as it is just me who gets to go.



When we arrived, we stayed at a small hotel where possibly the most famous ghost, Anna lives. Being a big tourist spot, no one dared go into room 204. Except us.



As we walked in, the tempature quickly and significantly dropped. You could feel warm and comfortable, but you didn't. You felt as if every hair on your arms, slowly rose due to the goosebumps forming on your body. The type of feeling that you didn't have to believe in ghosts in order to know something was up.



It was late, so I decided to go to bed. An insomniac, it was quite strange for me to fall asleep that fast. A woman, sobbing and sniffling, whispers “My true love, come back, I need you”. She goes outside and stands on the edge of the balcony, “Now we will be together forever”, and she falls off.



I open my eyes, and quickly wake up with a scream, I look behind me, to notice that same woman, with her mouth filled with blood, missing teeth, and a blank, gaze catching, icy stare. Her hair was gone, the only recognizable thing, was her outfit, which was covered in blood.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">I close my eyes, and open them again. My parents, shaking me awake.

<p style="margin-bottom:0in">“Oh, thank god, it's not real” I pant heavily, my parents showed me the time, I had slept the entire day. With my eyes open, and barely breathing, my parents thought I was dying.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">“My baby, your OK,” my mom cried.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">I explained to my mom the dream, and she told me “It must be Anne”. I told my mom we had to get out of here, we ran for the door, but it was blocked my almost a titanium metal.

We turned on the lighting, which was rusty and old. We just relaxed, and took deep breathes. I thought I was dreaming, but in reality, I was wide awake now, because closing my eyes and opening them, didn't work.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">We found an Ouija Board, we decided to try to contact Anne. My mom felt a sigh of relief, saying that if you summon an evil, sinister demon, you must burn the Ouija Board. Then she realized the box had not been opened yet. We took out the box, and opened it. Once again no ashes, so I think we all are hallucinating. We thought it must have been Carbon Monoxide poisoning, but then my dad pointed out something.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">“Look at the bottom half of the box” he pointed. We saw a horrifying thing to witness, ashes. Ashes and candle wax filled the bottom half of the box, while the Ouija Board wasn't touched. It appeared as if they tried to burn it, but they failed.

“Put it BACK!” my mom screamed at my dad. We all, panicked. That's when, the windows slowly cracked, and the temperature was freezing now. We hid in the bathroom, that's when my parents went from crying, to giggling. The turned on the lights, and I saw it.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">They had evil smiles, there eyes widened, and they started to follow me. I had the feeling they were possessed, or they were pulling a sick joke on me. That's when there voices changed, and they're is no way they could have faked it. As they kept following, I turned around. I noticed they weren't there, so I turned back the other way and planned to keep walking calmly around the room, till I could find a way out of here. The plan didn't last for long, because when I turned around my dad stood before me.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">He let out a loud yell, and knocked me down. He cornered me against the wall. So I had to do something, I still regret to this day, and honestly, I wish it would be different, but either two of us are getting out of there, or none of us are.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">So, I locked my dad in the bathroom, and said “Anne, your husband died in a horse riding accident, I am so sorry”, my mom started sobbing, and jumped out the balcony.

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<p style="margin-bottom:0in">That's when both me and my dad passed out. We woke up, and my dad and I noticed that the windows were ok, the door was unblocked, and he wasn't possessed. But he wouldn't know he was, so we left the building.

As he cried to see my moms body, bloody and beaten, he told me “Let's just say they're was a car crash,”.

I asked "But how did you.....", and he just giggled and drove home.

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