Talk:A Figure in the Fog/@comment-25941663-20150430163216/@comment-25148755-20150430170853

Appreciate the readthrough! I'll address your points:

Frank does have a lot going on. It would have been easy to make him just an unsympathetic monster, but I wanted to have a little bit more to him than just being a psychopath.

Regarding the kids' ages, I figure Jamie and Morgan are about 14. Lester is 8 (as stated) and Claire was 9-10. So while the older two are obviously intelligent, I don't think their speech was so advanced as to be unreasonable.

As far as Jamie's composure, a couple things. First, they had expected something like this and prepared accordingly. They read the journal, Morgan had seen Claire several times at her window, so there wouldn't have been quite the same shock as if it had been totally out of the blue. Lester is freaking out, but Jamie, as the older one, is more concerned with trying to save his little brother and the girl he's in love with...those emotions are enough to override his fear. I was also trying to say something, too, about the fact that he can face down supernatural terrors without batting an eye, but his father scares the shit out of him.

Jamie walks back to the house because he knows Lester is gone. The holy water was his one bullet and he already used it; we've already established the woman can mesmerize him with a glance, the only reason she doesn't get Lester as well, or get Jamie again after he snaps out of it, is because at the time she's preoccupied with being in Morgan's mind (which I will eventually develop what that all means). Long story short, there is literally nothing he can do to save his brother, but he's not willing to leave him to his fate alone. So he makes sure he manages to get the girl he loves out, then goes back in, already knowing what's going to happen.

Hope this allays some of the issues you had...thanks for reading and the feedback!