Talk:And She Danced/@comment-25052433-20150801232407/@comment-25052433-20150802024311

Don't be sorry, this was a damned good story and you should be proud. The ending itself can probably stay about the same. I would suggest perhaps adding a line that she called the cops but feels as though they won't arrive on time..that alone would break the cliche and add that element of human realism.

In the end, this is all just advice, as you clearly have a strong grasp on writing. I am looking very forward to seeing your future creations.