Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24773406-20140408125155/@comment-13937974-20140408205057

I liked it! I miss the days of Jeff the Killer and reading a good torture story before bed. I would watch out for full stops. In one of the sentences you said '  After school I would walk back home to more yelling and screaming I sneak in from the back door'. There should be a full stop after screaming. Otherwise it was a great story. It had a enough gore so that it wasn't over the top. Try going more into the mans knife wound to make it more disgusting. 8/10