Talk:The Walk Home/@comment-3541151-20141224124833

This had some subtlety and interesting story charm in the beigining and even was okay when it got going. Even the twist ending was startling and fascinating, but the harsh straight drop of the last two sentence is really appauling. It can be good and bad. Mostly bad, and I'd say it ruins the experience. It shocks and frightens, but it does it in a way that is more of a middle finger to the reader than an immersive leave. I think you could have killed the man with dignity, let the creature bring up his rookie life, or getting to meet his dead nefew, I dunno something that would be more subtle than this! It's like, you could have ended on this note, "To all those reading, if you think you're safe from me, FUCK YOU!!!". It would be shocking, but it also shows the immaturity in how the story was wrapped up. And I think the writer has some talent, I just think that they need to work on their story writing, because this is a poor example of an endind. The earlier stuff goes nowhere into the rest of the story, except for the setup, that is something that should be avoided, and I still find it more interesting than the payoff. 6/10 For good writing in the begining, lame writing at the end.