Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20140923012345/@comment-24040907-20141002004928

I was going to watch that movie, Event Horizon, but I never found the time. It sounds pretty good now that you describe it to me. Dark flow is actually a little different from Dark Matter and Black Holes. Scientists think that there could be massive (and I mean incomprehensibly large) celestial bodies beyond the visible, known universe that possesses a gravitational pull so strong it could rip an entire galaxy out of its orbit. A terrifying concept, when you consider that our galaxy could be next.

I think that it would be a good idea to describe the Nye-Am folks as being superior to humans, yet genetically related to them, giving your contrast of each races' level of enlightenment more depth. Just a suggestion.

Another thing, I must give you props for the gorgeously crafted dialogue. It dominated the last half of the story, felt free-flowing yet descriptive, and made sense as far as vernacular is concerned. I think you've taken a great step up, in my opinion. I could almost hear the fluxuation of tone in my mind as I read.

And I gave you an idea for a sequel? That's good to hear, I'm glad that I'm an influential part of this series. Maybe one day when it becomes a novel or a TV show, I'll have the satisfaction of gloating over my fellow critics, most likely saying something along the lines of, "I helped the author make this a reality!"