Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180930033305/@comment-35711173-20180930080402

I like it. The plot is a classic, definitely dating back to Twilight Zone. But you've got that Twilight Zone feeling. Setting it in what to us Americans is an exotic location helps.

The news report to summarize at the beginning or the end seems ... overused as a device. What does he see?

You can improve the language. " the sound of faint agonized moaning came through the speakers of his small vehicular radio device." Not clear. Does he have a small two-way radio in the car with him? Is he driving an American sized vehicle with a very small stereo? Is he driving a small Toyota with a normal radio for that vehicle?

I am guessing that vapor escaping was supposed to indicate death. For those of us who don't know the area he's driving in, we aren't surprised that it's below freezing.