Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35973449-20180625045115/@comment-35973449-20180629184613

Thanks for the review, I really do appreciate it.

The pacing is fast because I used a "hook." It's meant to grab a reader's attention and draw them in for more. I did try to slow down the pacing as you suggested but it felt sluggish and off. It didn't really work. I generally like to wrap things up at the end, which slows down the pacing, but because this is a pasta I felt that slowing it down would leave readers with a feeling of rest and completion. I'd rather leave them with a feeling of uncertainty. Which is also another reason why I didn't explain the disease.

If this were a horror movie I'd change a few things. If it were a regular horror story I'd wrap it up and answer some of those pesky annoying questions. I may still do that. However, I'm really glad that it felt like watching a movie because it means that it flows well.

Personal opinion here, but was there too much ambiguity? Or do you think there was enough information present without totally pissing the readers off?

Spelling and grammar errors? Still!? Ugh. I'll go over it yet again. Sorry about that.