Talk:I Laughed at a Funeral/@comment-5733573-20180511233739

Dearly beloved, we gather her to say our goodbyes to Leona Helmsley....

I have to abmit: I saw the twist ending coming from about two sentences in. That said, the character you managed to create is an interesting one, and this was well written overall.

There is one sentence that I thought could use some clarification:

"The family business was everything to her, the only one that mattered, and she’d destroyed hundreds of smaller establishments to expand the reaches of an already-enormous enterprise."

The word "one" is a bit confusing here. Maybe consider replacing it with a word that makes the sentence's meaning clearer.

Otherwise, very engaging and nicely written. I loved the trampling at the end there.