Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26037362-20150127204147/@comment-25941663-20150201145940

As Ruckus said (quite rudely might I add), you need to add punctuation marks at the end of every sentence. Even when people speak. Remember, when sentences don't end after a person is done talking, you should add a coma ','. Here's an example.

'Hi Bob,' John said.

Apart from that, the story has numerous issues. For starters, I am not sure why you kept writing Svensson over and over. Also, I don't understand the ending. Did the woman poison her husband? That should have been more clear.

I am sorry to say that, but the story isn't good. The concept of a woman confessing her crime to an officer is interesting, but in this case it is executed poorly.

Keep practising; nobody became a great writer overnight. The fact that you wrote a story and posted it here shows that you are on the right way. Keep it up and happy writing.