Talk:Queen Justine and the Cutest Little Shing/@comment-25226524-20150916190440

I have some mixed feelings about this one, but I really enjoyed the concept, especially the ending. This is very smart writing, there's no denying that, but it might come across a bit like propaganda to a lot of people. Now I realize it's likely just character development, but it was a bit over the top and I noticed the cop was even calling people crazy for their views. I actually thought you were putting a nice spin on it with the words coming up on the guy's body, because I thought it was going to be revealed that the words were actually describing him since he was obviously a bigot and whatnot himself, but then the end threw me off that line of thought. You don't seem like the type to use propaganda (this is obviously too blatant to have an agenda), so I'm assuming it's all about character development, but I guess I'm saying don't be surprised if people see it that way because it is pushing the limit on only being character development. That being said, it's likely a pretty good representation of what extremists/activists talk and think like, so it's probably not an issue: I've not known many and avoid them like the plague, so I'm not much of an authority.

The dialogue was hit and miss. I especially didn't care for the dialogue with the daughter - just didn't feel natural (I'll admit, I don't have children). The idea of this was incredible though. The mirroring of current events was very risky, but I give you credit for experimenting with it. The ending was great - near perfect. Even if I did see it coming a bit early, it was still stellar in my opinion. All in all, it's a creative, intelligent, and enjoyable piece that I feel could be great if it was trimmed a bit. Thanks for writing and posting it.