Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-38564973-20190218215450/@comment-35711173-20190219022440

NoTimeCreepy,

Then the author took it to the right place!

English: Three punctuation errors that I caught. That rate in two paragraphs of a first draft isn't bad.

At night, the knight wears a nightie and watches late-nite TV. No, that doesn't work. Too many knight's nights in the story. It's brain jarring.

"Once on a cold winter's evening a fellow knight sat on his home and relaxed while thinking of his kingdom."

or

"Once on a cold winter's night a soldier sat on his home and relaxed while thinking of his kingdom."

The two paragraphs are 185 words. I have never seen a creepypasta that short. A micropasta is like 500 to 1,000.

A creepypasta has creepiness and horror. I didn't feel creepiness anywhere. Somebody delivered a message for a soldier to go hunt a mythological monster. That's about all that happened. Except for the growl at the end, it all sounds normal.