Talk:Razor's Edge/@comment-5886533-20140331141334

5/10. I like the descriptive language, and I only saw a few grammatical mistakes. You definitely have skill. But the story just didn't do it for me. The monster reminded me too much of the Rake, and the dialogue between the two didn't seem realistic to me. (Honestly, if I were her I'd grab a weapon and leave the apartment immediately. But that wouldn't make a good pasta, would it?) I did, however, like how you used a turkey fork for a weapon, rather than the run-of-the-mill knife. And the ending was very unexpected (though a bit rushed). Overall, this pasta was a bit average to me, but it's still good. I can't wait to read more from you! And congrats on being nominated for PotM!