Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24304936-20140606132152/@comment-24101790-20140606133932

Gah, and I had just made corrections to it too! When I first looked it over, I didn't see any real errors other than possibly this one.

>saying she appreciated it but that she wanted to take some time off to “soul search” (for) another career choice.

I hadn't really heard of those garbage cans being called Toters, but that is a small comment.

Honestly I would say that the story is up to quality standards, but I understand that it is necessary to be critical of one's work. (I try to do the same.) I can't honestly think of any real ways to improve the story. It does its job well. It gives a peek into the mind of a man that has completely gone off the rails and the horror behind it is that he is hiding it so well that it seems like no one around him can spot it and that he has no intention of stopping.

In the end I would say it's up to you whether you want it to stay or not. I enjoyed reading it, but if you feel it doesn't reflect your talents adequately then that's your call.