Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25383866-20141021090212/@comment-25383866-20141023014757

Thankya fer feedback. I agree on a few points, some I do not. I made changes according to points one, three, and four. Point five I'm not sure I understand. That sentence is not prior to the manager scene; it's as it ends. Maybe you were confused as to why I didn't add it prior. In answer to that, it just felt right.

If this is finished, it will be a very, very long story that might be closer to a novella. Once again thanks for looking ot over.