Talk:Angry Man/@comment-25816739-20141206184355

You lost me when the angry man went from being under a bed to by a window without any transition of movement :(

Perhaps a bit more detail overall would help this story out; what's the kids room look like, why's the kid in bed, is it a boy or a girl, and how old are all good points to add in. Paint a picture, instead of having me detail the story myself. I would also reccomend checking the rules and guides on grammar, they're pretty helpful.