Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28871469-20161023115337/@comment-27905100-20161026234806

I agree with sourcecode. This is hardly a pasta. I have nothing to say about this one, honestly. If you want to write I micropasta, I'd recommend reading Empyrealinvective's Collection of Short Stories before I began writing, because you need an example of how to write a short story.

One last thing: the mindfuck on this is terrible, and since micropastas need these, as building tension during them is hard, I'd recommend scrapping this story and just writing a completely new one.

Also, finish a story before you post it to the WW