Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24989419-20140527232838/@comment-24381191-20140528201154

I agree with resident. There is almost no build up. The monster being some black goo is uncreative and there's nothing too special about it. Like 'Monster Blood' from the Goosebumps series (and I hated that book). You should have made the story longer and elaborated on what happened. The ending was too rushed and saying that his aunt found him is uncreative and sounds like something you would find in a kid's essay.

You're a talented writer but this story isn't very good.