Talk:Cure for Cancer/@comment-24532164-20160403042909

Decent writing, surprisingly correct use of a lot of scientific terms(even though the applications of 90% of it was impossible and stupid), but a completely ridiculous and nonsensical story with an asinie, illogical, "genius" protagonist. This story was long, it was dull, it had a dumbass protagonist who's first reaction to his girlfriend saying, "Hey, we should see other people" is to poke her boob and then FINGER HER! And then when she leaves and says, "We'll talk aboiut it" he takes that as "I'm leaving you forever" and decides the best course of action is to give her an experimental cancer BIO-WEAPON!? ARE YOU SHITTING ME!? Yeah, because the CIA is just going to leave him those files. And then she becomes a roach thing, his boner returns, and it infects him with cancer when he tries to bone it. Just...just not executed properly. Less build-up, more creepy, less disgusting. Disgusting transformation, by the way, for 3 paragraphs does NOT make this enormously long science lecture worth it in any way.

Also,"Glistening erection". Fucking hell, mate.