Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5960805-20150209043823/@comment-26027160-20150209212946

This is a very interesting work. It could have been more "twisted" if these monsters symbolised something altogether (if they already don't, if yes, show it:). I agree with SOURCECODE01. Since you use stanzas, you kind of say that this is a poem. I suggest that you cut the stanzas more evenly and (eventually) add some rhyme, as it will give the poem (or the poetic story) a certain flow. Remember that one of the major components in poetry is rhytm.