Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25014870-20140707160802/@comment-24352864-20140707162615

There are some technical problems like spaces between "noone" to form "no one" and "quite" must be "quiet" in that context.

The ending seemed too forced, anti-climactic and rushed. With a more proper build-up, this could've become a bit better and have a more, emotional and melancholic appeal like Penpal.

Some logic doesn't make too much sense. How come no one called the police until recently? The creepy neighbor addition was also rather meh and cliche to me.

It was rather weak all in all. A little more build-up and some of the other points maybe.