Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25899303-20141220153848/@comment-24381191-20141220175203

Just a disclaimer, sorry, but I'm going to be rude in this. Not all reviewers are like this but I come off as a little rude. Sorry.

First off, if you bothered to read the blacklisted subjects page, you'd know that pastas involving Jeff are not allowed.

Secondly, the grammar in this pasta is atrocious, I have no idea who is saying what most of the time. The idea of Slenderman mansion is just idiotic, whoever came up with that. You misuse elipses, don't know how to paragraph your work and have a ridiculous story. have sound effects like 'crack' and then write 'a twig breaks.' Just put one of them there, and if you choose 'crack' it should be in a separate paragraph of its own and preferably in italics, like so:

Crack.

Anne turned around, looking for the source of the sound.