Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28088262-20140704151238/@comment-4643170-20140711164630

Mystreve wrote: First of all, it's "in my ward", not "on my ward". Second, I think some more buildup would be nice as well. I'd like a cool backstory somehow linking the patient with the otherwise good-natured nurse. The ending just kind of fell flat for me.

Third of all, I think I should apologize for Exile's idiotic trolling. Him taking personal shots at you was inexcusable. He used our Writer's Workshop as a mastabatory tool to stroke his own ego. Complete idiocy. You won't be hearing from him for a while. I was just looking through this for a while and realized what a jerkwad Exile was being. Thanks for blocking him, because if you didn't, I was about to. How can someone be such an insensitive douchebag? I mean, really.

And as for the story, elaborate a little bit. Maybe the nurse struggles with the idea of pulling the plug at first, but her anger finally gets the better of her. Other than that, it's pretty good.

And could you capitalize the first letters of "three" and "twelve", just for consistency? I'm not sure if that would be grammatically incorrect or not, but if "Room" is capitalized, I believe it would be.