Talk:The Number of Darkness/@comment-26548430-20150710191358

Wow, I liked this pasta a lot! The twist was cool and unexpected. It made the sadness of it all come together more. The dirtiness that I tend to enjoy in short stories(everyone has their preferences, I like things more... adult) actually fit in with the plot without feeling tacked on and served a purpose.

Also, not sure if a certain line was a Monty Python reference but whether it is or not I still laughed a bit because I like the dialect used in the story(Good job on the language and "antiquated" style btw) This taking place in Humbolt County was a nice touch too.

FOLLOWING PARAGRAPH SELF INDULGENCE THAT DOESN'T GIVE MUCH USEFUL INFORMATION TO THE STORY. Ironically, I can relate to the story in weird ways( as I have recently torn a ligament in my left foot and have been on crutches for weeks and will be for a month. I didn't hurt my eye but not too long ago I got hurt two days in a row at work(the first incident being a huge hole in my left wrist the second a large hole under my mouth). Sadly, much like the narrators two daughters, I have somehow managed to make my two best friends, both of whom are women possibly permanently dislike me(I can kind of see his pain in a way) and I have taken a romantic interest in a best friend(also a pretty lady) whom I haven't seen in forever who just came back into town.

All in all, you are quickly becoming one of my favorite pasta writers as your stories are generally long, incredibly well-written, not afraid to be mature, and just plain appeal to my taste.

9.5/10