Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27439482-20151222001140

Hello everyone my name is Albertus Meppler5353, I am new to the Creepypasta community and I am here to get any reasoning on why story was deleted. I only been on for a day and I have already three deleted stories and I am here wanting any way for me to improve on this story which I really want to reach the quality standards.

Here's my Story Nearby my city, there is a musical school; inside are three classes, one for pianists, one for drummers, and one for guitarists. The school is always open for people around the world to visit and enhance their opportunities into becoming the next musical stars. If you visit the musical school, you would find that the musical school appears in good shape in structure, interior, and exterior. It would look so intact, that it appeared as if the school was built the same day you visited. When you arrived at the school’s entrance, proceed without hesitations into the building, as the doors are never closed. While you walk inside the school, look around through your surroundings. You would notice that the halls are extremely long despite the school being not as big as any school would be. Make sure there’s nobody present in the halls, if there is someone in the halls; exit the school immediately as you are not worthy enough to handle what awaits you. If there is no one in the halls, you may proceed. Keep walking in the halls until you find a girl. The girl will have purple eyes and wearing what would appear to be a black jacket with a guitar symbol on it. When you find this girl, she will appear smiling upon encountering you. If she is smiling ask her, “Where are the three music classes located?" You must be respectful and benevolent to her, as she is only a girl, with dire capabilities. If she tells you, “I don’t know where the three musical classes are located”, you will find yourself in front of the school, with no memory of you inside the school or the girl. If she tells you, “You are not allowed to gain entry within those classes”, you would blackout and find yourself with empty eye sockets and torn entrails. If she girl tells you, “I’ll show you where the musical classes are”, you must pray for what awaits you as you proceed on, as there is no turning back at this point. Once the girl has accepted your request, she will start walking. Follow her, as she will lead directly to the three musical classes. Do not lose sight on the girl. If you lose sight of her or don’t follow her, you would be dragged down by a black hooded figured, while in the process you’ll fall into a deep sleep and find yourself in a place of black emptiness, nobody will ever notice your disappearance as you’ll be trapped for eternity. When you arrived to the three classes, the girl will say, “These are the three classes”. Upon arriving, you’ll notice that there would be two other girls standing in the entrance of each of the classes. Each of them will have a shirt labeled for pianists and drummers. Greet them, show them kindness and loyalty. The girl who escorted you to where you wanted to go will ask, “Which class would you like to go into?” You must go into the guitarist class. If you tell the girl that, you want to enter the pianist class, she will leave and the other girl for drummers will do the same. You’ll be left alone with the pianist girl. She will not proceed to enter the class; instead you must step in first only to be devoured by an eight-headed monster. If you tell her that you would like to enter the drummers’ class, the same will happen as with the pianist class only this time, the pianist girl will leave along with the escorting girl. Unlike the pianist girl, she will enter first into the classroom. Once you set foot into the classroom, the door behind you will close, permanently. You’ll be locked in there for the worst. The drummer girl will transform into a demon and drive you beyond insanity. If you tell her that you want to enter the guitarists’ class, she will smile happily and both the pianist and drummer girl will leave. Once they left, you and the girl will be left alone. The girl will enter the guitarist class, you proceed after her. Inside the room you will notice that there no instruments for students to use. There will only be one instrument present in the room, a purple guitar, with decorative designs and symbols. If you spot the guitar, tell the girl that you want to play with the guitar. She will look bummed, but will say yes and allow you to play with the guitar. Once she says yes, take the guitar and observe it. While you’re making observations about the guitar, the girl will ask you to play a coherent and joyful song. You don’t have to be good at playing instruments, just play a few notes which will please her. After you have finished playing, she will show appreciation and ask you to come again next time. Give her thank you and say that you had a good time with her. For be such a kind visitor she will let you leave out the musical school with the purple guitar. After exiting the school, you are now the owner of the guitar. With this guitar you will have ultimate knowledge of the universe, find cures for all known diseases, solve every type of mathematical problem, and you will never grow old, no matter what age you are, you will always a youthful appearance. But there are two catches. For each time you play the guitar, someone you love will hate you, they will hate to the point they would want to kill you. You must always have the guitar at your possessions no matter where you go, leaving or losing the guitar will result in unfortunate events to happen upon you for life. Many people said that the girl who allowed the person go with guitar would appear angry and malicious and place a curse of every horrifying dream one can ever imagine, scarring them for life. 