Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-32391381-20170627025357/@comment-5614678-20170627100717

If you're writing a history pasta, you should come at it like a history teacher. When you talk about history you need to write like you have some authority on the subject, even if you don't. It's what gives the story an air of believability that makes it scary. The way you write is informal, like a forum post. Maybe you could use that to your advantage and write something like Candle Cove where people talk about Hitler's ghost on a forum? I dunno. All I know for sure is that in its current form, the story doesn't work.

This almost reads like a first draft. Something not meant to be good in any way, just a hastily-written rough outline - "Okay, here's what I want to see happen. This is the order I want it to happen in. This is how the tension builds up. This is how it all ends."

If you're satisfied with the story in its current form, I'd probably post it on CreepypastaToo because they're far less strict. If you don't like the story yourself but still want it out there, you can post it on Trollpasta. If you ever decide to make a video game pasta it'd belong on SomeOrdinaryGamers. If your story is based on a pre-existing Creepypasta, it'd go on Spinpasta.

I wrote that last paragraph because I want people to know that just because their story won't be accepted here doesn't mean it has to be homeless. Very important for up and coming authors IMO.