Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44781210-20200126141542/@comment-44778745-20200128214017

William See wrote: I dont feel too strong about the premise as it comes off more as a self-righteous villain monologue than another species I can empathize with. What exactly makes this Other better fit for the world than humans? How do they plan on so easily wiping out humanity when clearly they haven’t had much issue with them for some time now? Why didnt they do it before?

Theres truth to the reality of the scenario, but it doesn’t feel like theres much at stake. Even irl, many dont care or are ignorant of the environment and how it decays. If there was a proper setting and characters to empathize/get to know, the premise would be more sound. Make people care about a scenario where Humanity and Earth are at stake.

Maybe make it not so much self rightiousness as ownership. If you owned a beautiful artwork or a nice property and saw roaches and termites ruining its value it wouldnt be so much that you hate the termites itd just be business. Maybe run with that kind of narrative and just make it less personal and more "ill have the problem sorted out by monday." I liked the last line going slong that route "the plague will be unleashed tomorrow. I hope you will be there...