Talk:Car Won't Start/@comment-25975226-20150206123503

This was a good mid-way twist, and the guy sounds creepy AF. I just wish there wasn't so many grammar errors, it makes it hard to read and understand. I don't know if I'm allowed to edit admin's stories, but I certainly would change quite a few things in this. Please go over it again slowly, there are a number of grammar errors. But nice story, 8/10 :)