Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29633972-20160815171550/@comment-29598598-20160815235007

I'm sorry but this story has several fatal flaws. First and foremost: this is clearly a Jeff The Killer knock-off story. The wiki no longer accepts stories about/inspired by Jeff The Killer and your story would be deleted in a heartbeat if it somehow managed to get posted.

Second, there is a plethora of spelling and punctuation issues. I'm not going to list them here, but you really need to proofread your stories before publishing them, even if it's just to the Writer's Workshop.

Lastly, this story is extremely generic, cliche and uninspired. It is a textbook example of a poor OC (Original Character) story: Character was bullied/abused by other kids/parents for whatever reason, character snaps and goes on a killing spree and is still on the loose to this day. Additionally, there is the "you're next" cliche. Even if there were no spelling or punctuation errors in this story, it would still fail to meet the quality standards as it is just another Jeff The Killer wannabe.

I highly recommend you scrap this story as there it has no potential at all. When you write Creepypastas, the key to writing a good one is to be original and write about something not many people write about. There are literally hundreds of these Jeff The Killer knock-offs floating around on the internet. As a writer, you have to show people how your story sticks out and is unique. The " The Killer" idea has been done to death and is not unique in any way as they all have the same poor OC premise I mentioned above.

Forgive me if I'm coming across as harsh, but I'm giving you my honest opinion and trying to give you constructive criticism in the hopes that you can improve your writing skills. I hope this review helps you as you learn to write Creepypastas. I wish you the best of luck with your future stories.