Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25506761-20141011131848/@comment-24821182-20141011133318

I really liked it. It's pretty solid for such a short story, and if you were to post it as an article I'm fairly certain it would meet quality standards.

There are a few issues with the grammar I just want to mention:


 * 1: You're supposed to put a space after an ellipsis, just like you do with periods, commas, exclamation marks and so on.


 * 2: The first part of the story is written in present tense, and the last part is written in past tense. This gets a little distracting, seeing as how the story is told chronologically.


 * 3: You misspelled "torture" in the sentence "I truly did want to torture him a bit more..."