Talk:John's Story/@comment-25941663-20160206161803/@comment-26475800-20160209053315

Thank you for your review MrDupin. There were some issues with this story and that was done on purpose, kind of. I was trying to challenge myself, writing in a genre that I normally don't write in, which would be "realism" I guess. I wasn't trying to get a great twist at the end of the story, I mostly told what was going to happen in the first few paragraphs, nor had I tried to give too much description, because, at least in my mind, people don't really go into heavy detail when they are talking. In an attempt to make this sound as authentic as possible, I had sacrificed some details. That could be a reason why I don't really write in first person very often.

Anyway, I wasn't sure how this story would do, which is why I posted it here, and wanted to know what people think. Thank you for your feed back, it definitely helps for the next time I try to write something like this.