Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26416562-20151003132951

Not included in the story: I would like to say that I'm back t creepypasta. After a huge let down, I have decided to come back with another attempt that I hope might make it. Let's hope Grammarly helps. I've and more practice and adverbs and adjectives will be made.

We all know about the government watches us through online technology. Our first hint was George Orwell's 1984, a book about an astonishing secret he uncovered about London's government. His idea was that a part of the government was supposed to watch people and make sure they weren't traitors to their own country or as Winston, the character of the book called it thought criminals. If they were, they would be vaporized. Or in other words, killed.

Another notable hint was by a Russian man who made a video claiming that the NSA had spying technology over presumably every WiFi capable electronic. This time, though, America was provided with proof. The matter of the fact is that eyes watch from above. We must be delicate in our movements or perhaps we will find ourselves being tracked or killed.

But if that's not creepy enough, There's more. I What if I were to tell you why exactly they're watching you. Yes, they want to make sure you don't find out, but not exactly in a way ou would think. What if they were watching you The invisible horror that follows every single person in the world. The monster that would send a nation in chaos because of the fact that an invisible monster was following you. That's why the government vaporises those who knows too much. To protect the world, from unkillable monsters.

Hi guys, that's the end of the idea point. I would like to know if you think I should carry on with the idea or not. Now I know the ending takes a big leap, but maybe you could provide a better-ending idea or let me work it out. Thanks. 