Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26251513-20150506004958/@comment-26364137-20150506163748

AsAGrimAuxiliatrix1 pointed out, this story seems a bit too inspired by 11 Miles. Scrap this and start from the beginning, be original. At least, try something a bit more different than taking almost replicated events from 11 Miles. The story and the writing seems a bit rushed to me. Slow down, get some ideas running, and take your time.

Hope this helps!