Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10950063-20140714192528/@comment-25148755-20140715050505

I like where you are going with this and feel it definitely needs a conclusion. I get a kind of Hellraiser vibe (which is meant to be a compliment.)

I don't think there's an issue with the length. Each element generally serves to either drive the narrative forward or provide necessary backstory/create emotional connections so I think you are ok there.

Honestly, my biggest thought is I'm not sure you're really 3/5th through this. There are a lot of different places you can go  and trying to rush it to finish might diminish the decently strong piece of work you've started.