Talk:Faith/@comment-25941663-20190106180555

Hmmm.

I am not sure how I feel about this. I like the concept and I love the build-up. Adding the verses and the sermon was a very nice touch and great for atmosphere building. I also liked the family relationship. Their interactions were filled with tension and this dark, sickly feeling that follows these types of situations. All excellent work.

Unfortunately, the pay-off was not up to standards. I am afraid it left me disappointed. The story had no 'punch' to it. Even though the ending is definitely dark, it's not as hard hitting as I would have hoped. Killing off a random lady is not cutting it. I would have liked to have seen the psychological struggle of the child as it had its innocence torn apart.

It's not a bad story, it's just that it is luke warm. No real creepy-sauce or horror.

General Quality: Pretty much perfect, from what I can tell, apart from a minor typo. 25/25

Horror Factor: Unfortunately, as mentioned above, it was not particularly creepy. 13/25

Deus Vult: Even though the motivations of the characters are religious, the story in whole didn't revolve around religious themes. 18/25

Entertainment Value: It could have been better, but it was nevertheless a nice pasta. 18/25

Overall: 18.5/25