Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25112967-20140630153201/@comment-24918243-20140630170710

The story is okay, but I think there is one major plot hole in it. If Geoff was simply a maintenance guy, why would he have login privileges in the company network? Maybe you could change his job description a bit so he would have some real reason to login to the network.

Also, if you really wanted to get gruesome with this you could say he was actually decapitated by the wire. A thin copper wire given enough pressure (as would be expected from a very long fall) will do a lot more than just choke someone.