Talk:The Girl in the Middle of the Road/@comment-25052433-20140904061517

The good, the bad and the ghostly of this one, all summed up in a neat little review.

What went right:

-First off, this was well written and your grammar was on point. That is a stand out accomplishment for a lot of folks around here, so nice job.

-Your use of description and setting were good. This was a short story, so you didn't have a lot of room to build atmosphere, but you did a great job using what you had.

-Fear factor. It was a creepy little story. No major clichés either, so well done.

What should vanish like a ghost:

-No real character development. All I knew about the protagonist was that he/she moved into a new house in Philadelphia.

-Unresolved mysteries. Who was this girl in the street and what did she want? You didn't describe anything about our antagonist, other than the fact that she was a black haired teenager that could float.

-The ending. Nothing was resolved.

All in all, a good, short little pasta. I enjoyed the story and it was told very well. Excellent job.