User blog comment:Group935Pony/Help with a story./@comment-26475800-20170728175848

The best advice I can give you is to edit. Most of the stories that are deleted from this site are because the author didn't take the time to edit. Look for jarring errors.

Punctuation can be a problem, there is a trend of using ellipsis and semicolons when that's not the correct punctuation. If you don't understand how to use the punctuation properly, don't use it.

When you read your story, make sure it has a nice flow to it, don't have it be choppy or racing through intense parts. When you want to build tension, slow it down, you could also speed it up but make sure you have enough interesting things to build the tension and get the readers heart pumping. Also, have a mixture of long and short sentences, you don't want to have just one or else it makes the story feel a little monotone.

Use the WW, it helps a lot. A good number of the people on this site are willing to help and have fairly decent ideas on how they could help you. Take their advice and learn from what they tell you. Most importantly, don't get upset because someone said the story you've written it terrible, if they don't give any feedback on why it was, don't listen to them. What you want is the feedback that has honest constructive criticism, sometimes it may be harsh, but look at what they said the problem was and fix that.