Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24883632-20140509220318/@comment-24077689-20140513215257

DismembermentFTW wrote: Noothgrush wrote: A lot of sentence fragments, you need to use colons and semicolons in a couple places. I agree, the ending is cool, but I think the most glaring issue is the drawer thing. There's a lot about this that doesn't work. I have a very big clothes drawer at the bottom of my bed that I can climb in. How does this not work? Most standard dressers won't accomadate a full sized human.