Talk:Preta/@comment-5632489-20150603015405

(I am so sorry I hadn't gotten to this! It was long and I made the promise to myself to read it one day, and due to various issues I'd actually forgotten about the Mythology contest until someone brought it up to me last night...and I remembered I didn't read this one. Gah!)

First off, I will state that this is purely based on my reading of this specific story (as it was the one given for the contest), and that I have no previous knowledge of this series you have created outside of the Hindu references here (the Preta itself, plus the Rakshasa/Asura). For me, the entire read was rather confusing - I didn't identify with your characters (which I know have been introduced in other stories of yours before) and the like.

Do you have any other stories that tie into this one? I know you mentioned the prequel and tie-ins above, but I'd like to read more of these because you seem to know what you're doing in terms of writing. You seem to be more of a Hemingway style than a Faulkner style...I like that. Very simple and lots of dialogue but not so simple it reads like a telegram. On the topic of dialogue it was very good too; sprinkling some humor in there with Tullugaq and Maureen in there was a good way to spice it up a bit.

Though the story was very strange I really don't have any qualms with your writing itself. For that I'll give a 74/100. When I read more of your universe perhaps that rating will become higher. Keep on writing!