Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-8893293-20140808161648

so wrote my first pasta in one day and a writer is always their biggest critic. also the only person I can get opinions on is my own gf and there is conflic of intrest there. so I thought it would be best to post here under advice of another on the forum.

I have always been a depressed child, never knowing why but my doctor told me it was a chemical imbalance in my mind while the priest claimed demons at they are want to do but I never believed either of them, Just seemed too simple for either one to be right. The only thing that I can do to lift my spirits was video games, every console I owned was the one that would be the lesser of the available ones or at least the one that lost the console war, the dream cast, the psp, and the turbo graphic 16 which most would see as a curse but I always was happy about it, because I had the less played console I would always have access to games not a lot of people played, I bet not many of you heard of the Bonk games, or the pata pon series. I assure they are both great games and you should look them up given the chance.

Moving on though, my favorite game was for the turbo 16 CD add on (I was lucky enough to have gotten the version with the built in CD drive as it took a lot of lawn mowing to earn any of them.) and I kept the console in the best condition I possibly could just to keep playing it. Its name is guppy grove. It was simple and kiddy but I love it all the same.

It was a 2d rpg with an odd premise and the name didn't fit much. You played as a kid named Gup and the goal was the generic save the world from an evil wizard (his theme was very predator fish, his robes had fins and teeth on the hood to make him look like a shark and water monsters don't appear until the higher levels.). The twist was there was only one dungeon in the game and it was his tower with a lot of floors depending on the difficulty you picked but I had a code to bump it up to 99 floors. Each floor was big and had tons to do, every action you can do earns bonuses and when you start out you have to avoid enemies to do things like mine rocks do tasks to do rituals to boost your stats. It also had a two player mode that I never played and any attempts to caused the game to freeze though it could be that I only had one controller..

One sad day I was forced into it, as I had played the campaign so much the disk stopped reading and the game froze when I selected it, I think I was about 8 or 9 at the time. I was devastated when this happened because they don't make the game anymore and it was so unknown I cant find any information on it on any of the sites with turbo 16 info on them so I know it wasn't popular. It wasn't perfect by why cant the see how great it is those damn fucking idiots.

After a few weeks of not having any guppy grove I was feeling miserable, it was the only relief I had from my condition and the other games just were not doing it. Is this how an addict feels? I always assumed it was just my condition. An idea popped into my head, I don't know why its like I heard some one say it while I was stuck in deep thought. The single game didn't work but what about the multiplier? It could be just as fun all I had to do is get some one to play. As an only child it was hard but there was some neighbor kid who tried to be my friend once, maybe he would do and he even had a second turbo 16 controller to use.

After school one day he came over, wanting to play with me but honestly I could care less, I just wanted my game back, but was open to the idea of friendship and put on my best fake smile to try to make it a reality. It was in my room and I almost prayed for it to work as I booted up the game and selected multiplier and it came up to my relief.

The game explained the rules to us, one player was to leave and the other builds a floor with an in game level editor, after than the player is to return and see if he can get past the floor and if they do they get a point, after you switch roles and see if the other can get the point. You fail and the floor builder gets the point. Both agreed that this sounded like fun and we where ready to play.

“why don't you play the floor first, I know you wanted to play the main game and it seems to be the closest to it.” he offered. It was small but it meant a lot to me at the time. When we talked about guppy grove he seemed just as excited to play it as I was. I left the room and let him work, and he called me back some time later to a odd level he made. It didn't seem he was trying to make it hard but it had a bit of everything thrown in including some high level bad guys like the barracuda knights. I didn't care though, all I wanted was to play. All of my skills returned quickly and let me beat the level though I was nice enough not to show off. I let myself get hit a few times by the enemies and just ran past a few feigning they were too hard for me. Still I beat the level and claimed my point.

It was my turn to build the room and he let me have my privacy as I built the level. I worked hard on it, trying to keep from making it hard as it was his first time playing. I couldn't help but be proud of it, proud of what I had made and felt like I was the evil wizard making the first floor for Gup. Calling him back in I let him play, watching with delight as he worked out the controls and then played the game. He beat it easy, quickly and perfectly completing the level, even taking a few moments to show off how good he was. That showboating made me a bit angry, I worked hard on that level and and he just treated it like a joke. He laughed and called it a joke before sending me off to make a new level.

As I waited my anger grew. How dare he make fun of me like that, hes just a pathetic little kid who never adventured, and yet he acted so smug, that piece of shit was insulting my game with his actions. He called me back after a bit to play his new level.

That cheater had a single hallway too thin for me to go around the bad guys and then filled it with the barracuda knights again. The last level didn't give any good gear so I had to beat them with the weak stuff I had. He didn't have any chances to do any of the rituals to boost either. That son of a bitch, I was furious at this, not only did he make fun of me for my level but then he went and cheated. When I lost because I had no chance against so many knights he began calling me stupid for not being able to get past with a warm smile. Then he wanted me make another for him and to up my game and as he got up and left. Fine, he wanted to play rough I could do that. I worked with the accuracy of an artisan as I crafted this masterpiece. It was worthy of being the one hundredth floor, then I called him in.

I watched him play with glee, complaining about everything that he came across and I reviled in it. Still, he was quickly defeated baddies and was starting to get close to the end. There was no way, this game was so hard and I masterly crafted this level. How could this be happening? Still he continued to whine, looking worried at me. “this is too hard, your a cheater why did you do this to me?“ so much whining it was driving me mad and I stared at him in contempt. Just before he got to the exit ladder he triggered a ritual trap I set, each spot he needed to walk onto had a goodies on it that greedy bastard couldn't resist and his character died. At instant that he screeched, loud and ear-piercing as I clutched my head, begging for him to stop before knowing there was only one way to fix it.

I don't remember much but, I had him on the ground, beating his skull in with something heavy and getting my revenge for every insult he had given to me. The whole time he continued with that nails on chalkboard screech until his heart stopped, though I swear his lips were mouthing something but I couldn't hear over his screaming. The last thing I remember was seeing an image on the screen, I think it was the shark wizard watching, maybe the game over screen, but after that I blacked out, I don't remember anything but his body was gone and the only blood left was stained on the controller. I could still catch the scent of his brain falling out of his head but no one noticed and life went on as normal. I can even play guppy grove again though I cant find his controller... some one asked me the next day at school what was with the crying kid I dragged off...

I wore out the disk seance then, but its OK, I found a guy at school to play with, I hope his controller doesn't disappear.  