Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20180720101448/@comment-35711173-20180720190355

Hi,

The first line reads "I lay on the floor, blood surrounds me. Oh God, I say, and close my eyes."

From this, we have someone lying on a floor who has been injured. There is no description of the source of the injury. He could have had an accident and I'll assume so. It sounds like a very major injury to his leg. He's bleeding out and is delusional. He isn't even together enough to apply compression or a tourniquet.

Creepypasta requires creepiness and horror. I sense neither. This is the last thoughts of a man who had a nasty accident with a power saw. He is wondering about the many worlds multiverse theory as he is about to fade out.

I don't feel someone who is bleeding out. He doesn't report the symptoms of bleeding out. https://www.healthline.com/health/hypovolemic-shock