Talk:Alan/@comment-9041013-20160421193118

Well on in all this is a great piece

HOWEVER, and thats a big however, you've made some spelling mistakes here and there, for example when you wrote "Say" (if I remember correctly) where it should've obviously been "Saw".

Also you put up pictures which made up a lot of the eerieness for me, which means, unfortunetly for you - that the text isn't as good or descriptive on its own.

Other than that you've made some illogical points like a six year old being left by his mother with some "stranger" babysitter for days. Or the child being told a scary story before bed even though he's already a weird ass kid, that somehow has a really late curfue for his age. The most illogical point you've made is a woman leaving a corpse in the room of her child, where the man who the corpse used to be tried to rape the child and leave the child to stay in the room...

The ending was great however

So i give you!!! dun dun dun

7/10