Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26416562-20150530031455/@comment-24101790-20150530032703

Multiple grammar issues: it's=it is, its=possession

Punctuation: dialogue should be in quotations. Hyphens missing from words directly impacting one another (shadow-like)

Story issues: The story is rushed and comes off more like a premise than an actually story. (Monster description is generic)

Writing a micro-pasta is not an easy task (which is why you don't come across many on this site.), I really feel like you should focus on simpler things rather than trying to tell an extremely short story as your last few have been deleted fairly quickly.