Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32657455-20170723015645

So, I uploaded a creepypasta/poem but it got deleted right away. I have been working on this one for maybe 2 days so I might be blind to some errors but I can't really find any... or is it just simply rubbish?

He calls at me late at night, inviting me into his world of fright

A world filled with ghouls and demons, looking up to him as a beloved leman

He offers me the world and more, just to join him in his castle of gore

I try to look away and stop to care, but when he gets close, its hard not to stare

His face is filled with joy and laughter, imploring me to come to his hereafter

He offers me to be his queen, for the beauty of mine is rarely seen

Just a fool would dismiss such an offer, a world filled with fortune, where gold and diamonds are filled in coffers

I take his hand and follow him to his dark den, where I will spend the rest of my existence without an end.



  