Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20170318124910/@comment-25458443-20170318141419

I definitely understand your points, but for the awkwardness specifically I sort of...like the awkwardness? I kinda wanted it to feel like it was written poorly because the sort of thoughts of somebody running for their life in a grotesque dark corridor isn't really elloquent it's weird and stilted and hard to make out. But if none of that at all is conveyed then of course I'll have to try something else to get that across or abandon that theme all together..