Talk:Antran/@comment-31526827-20170315184646

Three things:

1) good story!

2) I'd make a strong tie in with the red toy car (no need for the extra comma when you mention "favourite, red, toy car." at the very end: when Adam is bruised the first time, the punishment should be to take away the toy car. This way, his returning the car later is saying; I punished you by taking away your favorite thing.

3) Can you please tell me the original source of that photo? I've been trying to find it everywhere!

Thank you!