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So, I am planning to make a new story. (For those waiting for me to make The Escape from Pain, that's coming out in a few months, hopefully.)

This story is called The Black Beast. It is about the diary of a man in a college for proggraming. He has frequent episodes of sleep parlysis, a condition in which you wake up and can't move, and experience hallucinations of an intruder in the room.

I am planning for it to go like this. The man's first sign something is off is that he starts having a reoccuring hallucination during sleep parlysis where a voice whispers "Not yet." For about a week or so, he has this same hallucination every night. But since he has been having hallucinations for a long time, he doesn't feel creeped out by it. He does take notice that the voice saying not yet first sounds delighted, but sounds more impatient overtime, as if it is waiting for something.

Afterward, he starts having the same hallucination, but instead of not yet, the voice says, "I will be very soon," sounding more excited. Not only that, but as a side note, a day after the first time he experiences that, it happens again, but while the voice is being heard, the door of the man's room opens, (in his hallucination) but the sleep parlysis episode ends before the man can see what opened it.

Over the next 5 days or so, the sleep parlysis episode repeats, but with the episode lingering for longer after the door is open, showing that it is being opened by a black, humanoid creature with glowing green eyes and with the smell of a decaying body. Then one night, the episode repeats, but when the man gets up after the episode, he sees that although his door was closed when he slept and only opened it the hallucination, it's wide open.

The narrator is scared, obviously. He considers telling his friends, but he thinks they won't believe his outlandish story and they would think he was getting into his old habit of pranking people. So, instead. he changes to the top bunk, which used to contain his roommate until he graduated. Because of his choice, he stops having sleep parylsis for 2 days, which I will take advantage of to describe more on the narrator's personal life. But on the third day, he wakes up and finds himself back in his bottom bunk, and has the hallucination again, except it's worse.

It's where the hears the deep voice saying "Missed me?" Then the door opens, and the black beast walks in, and for the first time, gets to the narrator's bed before the episode ends. He turns the man on his back and looks closely at him. Then the episode finnaly ends. Afterward, the narrator continually looks through the internet to find simliar cases of this, only to find none. He tries desperatly to think of a none-supernatural explanation for what is happening. He starts to feel depressed, as he begins to consider the possibility that he is suffering from some sort of advanced mental deteriotion that is causing him to sleep walk and make his hallucinations more vivid, as that's the only explanation he can come up with.

Finnaly, his last diary entree describes the hallcination getting much, much worse. He hears the voice say "We will be ready tommarrow." The black beast walks in and gets close to his bed, although not as close as last time. Sundenlly, the narrator regains his ability to move, but the hallucination lingers. He does what anyone one else would have done. He runs, shoving by the creature. He runs down the hall to escape his dorm, when the creature follows him and runs at a hyper fast speed toward him and begins to circle him, making the smell of dead bodies so terrible that the man blacks out.

When he wakes up, he is STILL in the middle of the hall. When he goes into his room, he notices the knocked-over chair in his room that shows that he did indeed run into the hall. He ends this last diary entree by saying that he is sure the beast is going to return the next night, so he says he will sleep with an army knife that his dad gave him.

My question is, I do not want to turn the diary into just a log of his sleep parysis episodes, but at the same time, I do not want to sound like this man's liofe aside from the hallucinations is the improtant part. I plan to use comedy during the non-sleep parysis parts to keep the audience invested. How else could I do this?

Thanks for reading this long rant, and bye. 