Talk:NoEnd House/@comment-24316116-20131221130207

I feel like all the readers here are 10 years old. Why is this being praised?

Don't get me wrong, the basic concept of the story is good, but that's all that should be used to describe it. Not great, not awesome. The idea of it brings so many possibilities and the directions it took were definitely on point. Unfortunately this is the internet, I could quickly come up with numerous major problems about this story but my criticisms would probably fall to deaf ears and defensive replies so I'm going to stuff it. But let me at least say that one of the ways this story attempts to thrill you is the passages of time.. "I waited for at least an hour", "it felt like I was there for days" and that's awesome except those words are quickly read through to the next happening and the reader doesn't FEEL like the character has been there for days. Sitting and staring at a door for an hour can be pretty grueling for some, just typing out the sentence and moving on is so cheap. Try doing it. Sit in front of a door for as long as you can. Before 15 minutes are up your going to become impatient and give up, or impatient and stew in a wide range of frustration as you bargain for time to pass, or you'll start day dreaming, but you won't just blink and be done. When you try to make time pass, spend a page writing about the range of thoughts or sounds or feelings, by the 5 minutes the reader spends reading about them, waiting to get back to the plot, the reader is going to FEEL like an hour has passed just from you teasing their impatience, and it's usually an amazing place in the story to work on character developement.

I wonder if the original author looks at this story, matured by the years since he crafted it, and feels embarrassment at such an amazing idea that fell short at his impatient writing.

Also 9 rooms = 9 circles of hell. No illusion about it after room devil-girl. The 10th is prolly suppose to tease your mind of pushing beyond the most evilest thing in existence.