Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25089712-20140621173512/@comment-25089712-20140622040609

Thank you, very very much! I'm sorry you found it confusing. I can understand how the way the story was written could be confusing but I'm afraid I am lost on how to fix the grammatical errors, because I put it through several diffrent spell/grammer checkers and trust me I have read it aloud, in my head, etc a thousand times. And I very much understand the police officer thing, I wasn't going to even keep that in there orginally, but I figured this was a critque and wanted to see others opinions. The diffrent version of that is a lot more subtle in showing how bitter and rude of a person she is now, which is what I hoped to accomplish with that scene. If I was actually submitting this I would have cut out a lot.

I am glad the ending left you in the dark though, I tried to very vaugly imply she had something to do with the murders of those people, hence the blood all over her. And the boy who looks like/is her represents the side of her that was under the influnce of slender. He is not real, but serves as a kind of companion for her. This certaintly isn't a finished story. I really had no idea where to go from there which is why I left the ending with missing pieces and why it seemed rushed, even to me. But now I have an idea of what to do! So, again, thank you.

I also have no clue what to use for a title and as I mentioned I don't know how to go about the grammatical side of it, so further help with that would be great if you wouldn't mind!