Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-11335105-20140525223718/@comment-9967354-20140526081942

This is pretty awful, and if you can't see why, I can't help you there. For one, the story sounds like a joke, and now I'm wondering if it is. You know how in Trollpastas the whole story is summed up into a single paragraph with mind numbingly bad grammar? That's what's happened here, except you can always work on grammar. The story, however? I think you should scrap it all, and maybe think of something new. I'm sorry, I'm just being honest here.