Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25421326-20160803161938/@comment-25421326-20160804013309

The last part was supposed to signify the character's death, with the last meal, and being "released." I hope that adds a more interesting twist on how the poem is portrayed.

As for grammar, that is easily fixable. The rhythm inconsistencies also show the insanity of the main character, and how after being tormented by the suited man he has become mad.

I did put a fair amount of effort into this one, and feel that after a bit of tweaking it may be suitable to be reviewed again.