Talk:The Girl with Golden Hair/@comment-26030957-20160603172903/@comment-28575580-20160603223629

Humbolt, thank you so much for the constructive criticisms.

I've read Perfume, and though my inspiration did not come directly from it, I was aware I did not want to emulate the olafactory aspect, grateful you recognized that.

That the narrator's gender threw you off was intentional...might be a cheap literary device, but I decided to keep the ambiguity :)

I appreciate the sentiments about a creepier hook. I struggled with that earlier on, largely due to the scociopathic lie the protagonist tells herself, viz., she adores long blonde hair. Initially, I felt that I must have a scarier hook, but later felt that such a thing was gimicky. I also felt that allowing the reader to see through the killer's eyes  viz., unaware that Lydia's "adoration" was really a scociopathic fixation, would more successfully blur the lines between sanity and insanity. Yet I do want it more disturbing.

I thought about backstory, and though some documentaries show psychopaths concerned about their pasts, so many obsess over the present and future.

But I will play with the ideas, and would love to increase the story's length at any rate.

Yes, haha, the lesbianic (shameless rip from that nutcase Yiannopoulos) scene was intentionally subtle, mainly because I also wanted to fool the reader into believing Lydia's fixation was for a homoerotic experience, then show it really was all about her fetish for hair. If you're looking for steamy lesbian horror, you will quite enjoy my short story (hopefully series) about a Psych ward caretaker and her lesbian patient. Ghosts, hauntings, terrors in the night, and full on lesbian fun.