Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20190722204241/@comment-36627132-20190722204739

Spelling and Grammar Issues: The paragraphs are seperated by two spaces instead of one which gives it an unpleasant look. The story is missing proper punctuations as well as quotation marks.

As for the story itself, it suffers from tense swaps and is your typical OC vehicle that follows the Jeff inspired formula.