Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-11823370-20150525000410/@comment-24101790-20150525005649

When posted, the story was a wall-of-text with multiple paragraphs bleeding into each other. (A typical paragraph is five to ten sentences. Shorter paragraphs are fine for emphasis, but too many strips it of its purpose.)

The also has coding issues. The figure looked up at him, and his face was too cloaked in shadow to make out any features (which was odd for such a sunny day, George realized), but George thought he could detect a faint trace of a grin emanating from beneath the hat.

Dialogue should use quotation marks (or a single quotation depending on your style). Using multiple causes formatting/stylistic issues as you unintentionally italicized a series of dialogue lines. As two apostrophes italicize a phrase and three put it in bold. (As seen above)