Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37482493-20190220153625/@comment-36627132-20190220211714

Spelling and Grammar Issues: This story's biggest issue is unnecessary capitalizations ("place called Teketown, Nor is there a place" you don't have to capitalize words that come after commas. 'A couple years ago, My best friend" "(My Friends Town)" none of those words needed capitalized.) Next you needed to add spaces after colons . "Her and her towns death" you forgot the apostrophe in "town's", remember towns = multiple towns, town's = possessive. "And Here" "here" did not need capitalized. "better town, Called Teketown." "called does not need capitalized.

Spelling and Grammar Issues Continued: "We started out as monkeys, them Homo Erectus" you mean "then" not "them". "Tornados from god" God should be capitalized. I suggest you proof read your next work.

Plot Issues: This story leaves a lot of unanswered questions: why did he explore her house? And what's this about the town's death? Why did the main character impulsively take the newspapers? Why are they building an entirely new town instead of reconstructing the one that was destroyed? And how does the main character know it will be a better town? "I couldn’t stay long because trespassing on an investigation scene is a crime." so is stealing things but that didn't stop the main character. I might be over thinking this, but why did he read the newspapers? It might just be me but the concept of a fortune telling newspaper seems a little bit cliche and predictable.