Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27086420-20151018050712/@comment-27012445-20151021122721

The writing skills are very good with only some minor punctuation errors. The story itself was a bit hard to follow. I wasn't quite sure what message you were trying to get across. The big question asked, the big reveal "what did I do that I wanted fixed or removed" with the intro about completely messing something up was disjointed. I really was unable to get a clear understanding of what the story was trying to say