Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24918243-20140516065720/@comment-24821182-20140516080922

I thought the story was pretty good, and if you proofread it, it could probably be submitted to the main wiki.

I don't understand how one clown managed to set a tent on fire, let a bunch of animals loose, and bash people's heads in. Didn't one of his fellow performers try to stop him? Wasn't anyone keeping an eye on the animals? How would you even go about setting a tent on fire with no one noticing in time to stop you?

I'm assuming the clown let Jimmy live because he was Coulrophobic, but why would Ebil continue to visit him every night, when the kid had been scarred for life? Did Ebil decide he'd had enough of murder, and would just stick to scaring the shit of some straightjacketed mental patient?

Anyway, once you've proofread the story, you could try posting it as an article.