Talk:Vents/@comment-33348704-20180202104202

How did this guy not know he doesn't have any air vents in his room to begin with? Why is the guy disfigured and mangled and bloody for absolutely no reason other than "ohh spoopy man"? Why does he float? THERE'S NO REASON FOR ANYTHING IN THIS STORY. FUCK. Look, you're probably young and inexperienced, but if there is one thing people don't like in creepypastas, it's gore for the sake of gore. Disturbing imagery in these sorts of stories can work, but there needs to be some sort of build-up. The story comes off as very impatient and too eager to show some scary creature. My favourite example of a story that uses a grotesque creature would be "How monsters are made", not sure if that is the official name of the pasta but it's the name given to it on CreepsMcPasta's channel. While it has a horrible creature, the creature's appearance plays into the story and develops throughout the story.