Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-40022501-20190712212238/@comment-40022501-20190714084310

Thank You BloodySpghetti for your review, Let me try to address some of your issues.

First, I know my grammer sucks, I've always been horrible at grammer. I'll fix these mistakes when I get a chance.

Second, My line of thinking was that the F.B.I often tries to solve mysterious/strange murders/deaths. Thus would be called in to solve this strange crime scene as described in the story.

Third, the F.B.I wanted to hire me/The Alaskan because for two reasons. 1, I'm well-known to be a great hunter and trapper and, 2, because I'm a registered big-game guide= my skills are for hire.

Fourth, I semi-agree with your idea of being hired by something other than the goverment, but I don't know where exactly in my story I messed up "goverment procedure" or the like. If you could provide examples I would really appreciate it.

and Fifth, Sarah wanted to capture the ape, instead of killing it, I was thinking she wanted to study the creature rather then just shoot it.

P.s The final line will be removed, This is original reddit pasta, and I just copy and pasted here. Thanks again for your review