Talk:Amber Widow/@comment-5733573-20180620182131

I kind of like it. It's a fun read.

It's not without it's flaws, though. There are some places where it needs a second proofreading pass to clean it up. There's also some awkward wording in places, so I suggest reading it out loud to yourself to find where those are. Also, the livestream comes out of nowhere and feels like an add-on at the end, so maybe it would be better to establish that the livestream exists earlier in the story.

Apart from all of that, I quite enjoyed this little story. It's believable and creepy. Nice work!