Creepypasta Wiki:Deletion Appeal/Archive 17

Doorstop
I think my poem "Doorstop" was deleted because of the formatting issues and it didn't really look like a poem. When I copied it over, it looked fine, but when I published it, it turned out horrible. Also, someone marked it as a "Trollpasta" for some reason. I think it might have been because of the weird titling and how they didn't think it was a poem. If you could let me try to fix up the stanzas and line breaks that would be nice. But if it actually didn't meet the quality standards and it wasn't a formatting issue, then I'll accept that. Thanks. Also, if someone adds your article to the trollpasta category is it almost automatically deleted?

Leadtipreal (talk) 08:27, August 22, 2015 (UTC)
 * Hey, we rarely delete stories because of formatting issues alone - it's only if a page is "unfixable" formatting wise (without extreme effort on our part) that we will delete it.


 * In this case, your story was deleted because it wasn't up to the quality standards. It lacked any real build up - everything seemed fine and then, out of the blue, the reader is randomly mutilated. There needs to be more of a build up to the climax, otherwise, as in the case of your story, it's difficult for the reader to understand what's going on, and can make the story appear absurd.


 * This issue is made worse by the fact that you're writing in the second person. While writing in the second person, when done well, can be extremely effective, if the story lacks a developed plot, it can make the story seem odd.


 * Additionally, I'm not quite sure what you're attempting to portray here - too many questions are left unanswered, which makes the entire thing feel confusing. Does a doorstop literally come alive? How/Why? Why does the doorstop want to kill people?


 * Your appeal is denied for the reasons above. Feel free to submit your story to the Writer's Workshop for review/improvement, then try again. Have a good day :)


 * 08:44, August 22, 2015 (UTC)

Hell On Earth
With all due respect I really don't belive that my story should've been deleted, it was well written with an orignal story and it didn't seem to have any formatting issues. I would like to know personally why it was deleted and honestly it got deleted in a minute of it being uploaded and I highly doubt you could read all of it so quickly


 * It was deleted for not being up to [quality standards]] due to the multiple punctuation, capitalization, and story issues, which is why this appeal is also being deleted:


 * Formatting issues: This is how a portion of your story is formatted: "Great, this day couldn’t be more perfect. I decide to suck

it up and just walk home; it’s only a 25 minute walk… I’m sure I’ll be fine. I"


 * Punctuation issues: a majority of your dialogue lacks punctuation. "“Detention(apostrophe missing)s over! You may all go home now(,/.)”", “No, I’ll be just fine”, “YOU ARE MONSTERS” I scream.", etc. Punctuation missing from abbreviations: "Mrs Grendall", "“Sorry Mrs Grendall.”", etc. Punctuation missing from sound effects. Sounds are treated like sentences so they need punctuation: "SCREEEEEECCCHHHHHHH(!)", "THUNK THUNK THUNK(!)", "SLAM", etc. Quotations missing from dialogue: (")“Hush child and I’ll explain all, come outside with me.(") She" Commas missing from sentences utilizing pauses in flow: "“Well why can we see them?”", "“Well we must be in Purgatory right? (space uneeded)“"


 * Capitalization issues: "“You look a little cold, want a ride?” Says (says) a deep voice from the car.", "“No, I really think you need a ride home” He (he) says,", "“We want to kill you” Answers (answers) the driver. "Wording issues: "it’s pace" it's=it is, its=possession. You shift between capitalizing grandma and leaving it uncapitalized. If you are using it as a title, it should be capitalized and uniform throughout the story.


 * Story issues: the protagonist goes from being murdered to waking up without a reasonable reaction. "I reach my house and peer through the window; my parents look quite worried, probably because I am late." You could argue it's due to the fact they've forgotten, but writing this all in first person weakens that process as the protagonist is explaining everything step by step. The ending also needs a lot more explanation: "This was (is) my fate, this is all our fates for Earth is Hell, and we are the demons." How does lingering around on earth make them demons? This isn't explained and if anything, they're more like ghosts. Those were a few of the issues present as I read your story and this is why the appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:55, August 24, 2015 (UTC)

The Quiet Neighborhood
I tried another shot at writing a pasta and it got deleted. I knew there were a few spelling errors so i decided to fix them but guess what! It got deleted before i could fix it. I mean it was only up for a minute, that is not fair and if any other kind of error like grammar,punctuation etc. doesn't make much sense since i wrote it in it Microsoft Word which has spell check.

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(Signature isn't working for me)


 * Spell check doesn't catch a number of punctuation, wording, or story issues. You really need to review your story before posting it and making sure it's up to quality standards. Treat posting a story on this site like turning in a test at school or a report at work. It should have only a few errors (none of them being major like story issues). Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards and since you still haven't made any attempt to correct the punctuation, wording, story issues (as per the header above); the appeal is also being turned down.


 * Punctuation: a majority of your dialogue has punctuation outside of the quotations and is missing from before the dialogue. "...bit(,/;/.) “I don’t know it’s just quiet”.", "“Okay”", "I ran at him “Hey!”" Apostrophes missing from possessive words: "dog(')s head"


 * Wording issues: "The attacker has not been found but there are multiple suspects and (who) are be questioned by the police”.(punctuation goes inside dialogue)" The story shifts from past tense to present tense a number of times: "I pet his dog." (present tense) "Some birds flew over us." (past tense)


 * Story issues: Dialogue should be spaced out so two speakers are never talking in the same paragraph. This is done to prevent misattribution. You are need a lot more description in the story: "I saw multiple people doing some weird ritual; I backed up to check if it was a church" How was the ritual weird? These things build up an image and without them, it makes the story read like a check list, which is another problem here. ("I scratched his dogs head then went back inside, and plopped down on my couch. I turned on my radio and picked up a book, I switched the channel to the news.") This makes for an uninvolving story as the audience is merely going step-by-step through the story without any description or feeling of suspense. You also give a lot of extraneous information. The title for example has little to no bearing on the story. Robert and Justin are mentioned once/twice and have no influence on the plot really.


 * The ending also needs work. "I saw a bunch of bodies everywhere and I then saw (redundant) blood on my hands, I realized I was holding a knife." Was the protagonist possessed? If so, this isn't explained at all in the story and just comes out of no where. There's no indication or clues for the audience to follow. As you can tell, there are a number of issues present in the story that has led to this appeal being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:19, August 24, 2015 (UTC)

Virtual Nightmares
To be honest being the first time I post a pasta here, I never thought admins would be strict and fast at checking pastas. Sorry on my part, I didn't take the time to edit the page I created. But, I had this pasta checked and proofread a month ago. If I may post the link, here it is:
 * http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:467275
 * http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:468836

I used the source side to paste the pasta and used visual to set it to header 3 and made bold the first line in the pasta. That's all the editing I did and published immediately. After that I change tags/category below and added Video Games and Dreams. Ninoboy09 (talk) 12:27, August 26, 2015 (UTC)


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards and after looking at the deleted story and your revisions, I'm afraid it still has a number of issues, mainly with punctuation, wording, and story issues.


 * Punctuation: improper use of commas. "I had my mother, (comma not needed) dear, cover..." I assume you wanted to use the phrase "mother dear" or mother, dear mother" here. Phrasing issues: "Rage and anger boiled in my wake consciousness,"


 * Wording: awkward phrasing: "cover me up with explanations", "I would utter crude words, which I learned from the box, to all my hatred.", etc. Wording issues: "...explanations that, as a kid (an adult), I still don’t understand." I think you meant to write as "an adult" because the protagonist was a kid when given those explanations. "I would be the mafia gangster doing drugs and vices" Vices is a non-descriptive word, it is something akin to saying "doing sins". It doesn't paint a picture and limits the story. You are telling the story in past tense so your tenses need to reflect that. "She tells (told) me of a train-spoon with scrumptious rations and a nice fat man giving gifts every end of the year.", "And when someone dies (died) and has done well they gets (get) angel wings and flutter to Heaven.", etc.


 * Story issues: the story has some fluidity issues: "We played Horseshoes in our backyard every afternoon. Dreams of wonderful things and discoveries started processing through my mind." It jumps from horseshoes to the protagonist's aspirations with little connection. The tone really doesn't match the protagonist. He explaining concepts like heaven and hell in a very simple manner ("they gets angel wings and flutter to Heaven. If not, one gets to ride to Hell and be poked with pitchforks on their ribs and butt for the rest of their lives.") and then he writes this: "The visions in my reverie were starting to become worse." I know you're meaning to write the story with the protagonist being detached, but shifting between child-like thoughts and more mature prose really weakens the story. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:29, August 26, 2015 (UTC)

The Silent Slasher
My creepy pasta is "The Silent Slasher" by PixelatedDeath. Honestly i would like you to appeal this, but i don't care if you do. I spent hours writing this story and trying to make everything perfect, yet because little things were off you deleted it. Things that if you don't dive deeply into the site rules you wouldn't know. You never said that there were parameters to writing here. Which in itself is stupid because this is a wiki page. This is ridiculous, the very fact that someone tried to fix my spacing and you still deleted it made their efforts in vain. Honestly it's idiotic that people trying to share their stories need perfect formatting or else it gets deleted. I understand that formatting and these other things are important, but this should be a place where people can share their creepy stories. I find it ridiculous that you will go through these stories to find their faults to delete them, but won't fix them in the process to save them. I want my story to be heard, I know its a good story because people have told me, but if this site is really going to be stuck up like this. Then I don't want it told by this site. Wiki pages were made for stories to be told whether true or false and honestly you lost that somewhere a long the way. So no matter how strong you think you are because you think you can play god with these stories. I can tell you, you're ridiculously looking for perfection. It shows that you really don't care about these stories just the way they're told. One of the worst parts is you don't even try and help these writers. You don't tell them "Hey your story has these mistakes.". You just give them a time limit before you delete their stories. I see now you just look for perfect formatting and grammar rather than best story, and to me...that's sickening...--PixelatedDeath (talk) 22:22, August 28, 2015 (UTC)


 * As I said on your talk page, your story is a massive wall of text, you don't capitalize "I", you don't put apostrophes in possessive words, commas are missing from pauses in sentence flows, you randomly capitalize words in sentence, you shift between past tense and present tense multiple times through-out the story, then there's the issues with the OC, I'm sorry, but this isn't a few mistakes, there is almost an issue in every sentence of this story. We have the writer's workshop to help out users with their stories. This appeal is being turned down because it fails to meet [quality standards]] (or grade school-level grammar.) You've made no attempt to improve this story or fix any of the issues pointed out. You haven't even bothered to use the writer's workshop, which was set up to help starting authors. This is on you, not us. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:30, August 28, 2015 (UTC)

Untitled
I want to know this. I`ve written 3 creepypastas, CleverBot AI, Check Behind You and A Cracked Door. All of which, were deleted. I wish to know what qualifies a page for deletion, as I spend alot of time on those pastas, and they all disappeared while I was editing. Please reply to this, and ressurect one if you think it`s good enough.


 * Automatically declined due to not following the guidelines outlined above. Correct those and we can begin the appeal (although I would strongly recommend reading the quality standards, rule on unfinished pages, and the cliche guide before then). EmpyrealInvective (talk) 16:01, August 29, 2015 (UTC)

The Blu Medic
Woah, I thought you LET me repost this one! And if so, I HAVE TO DO THIS ANYWAY! *Frusterated "Grrr!"* &#34;Hey look, bud, Im a engineer main in TF2, and you gonna have a bad time when i enter the server you are on&#34; (talk) 22:43, August 29, 2015 (UTC)


 * Your last appeal was denied and I left a message saying not to repost it without doing a deletion appeal (which you did, ignoring my warning.). This story falls well below our quality standards with its numerous spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and story issues so I'm denying this appeal (again). EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:46, August 29, 2015 (UTC)

Well, Damn it. I'm going back to YWW wiki. And Go on, see if I care *Sniff* &#34;Hey look, bud, Im a engineer main in TF2, and you gonna have a bad time when i enter the server you are on&#34; (talk) 22:50, August 29, 2015 (UTC)

Mary, Mary Quite Contrary
Okay my story got deleted for adding non existant categories, i didn't know of this rule and will comply in futire sorry for that

Masterire (talk) 20:57, August 30, 2015 (UTC)


 * Actually your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. While the category rules are important, they never result in a story's deletion. Our standards for poetry are especially stringent due to the number of poems we receive and their frequent issues with punctuation, capitalization, rhyme, flow, meter, etc.


 * Punctuation: a number of lines from your poem are missing punctuation. "With axe heads and storage sheds", "Mary, Mary, Quite Contrary", etc.


 * Capitalization issues: The first word of new lines should be capitalize as well. "tales (Tales) of candy, you really should go.". Improperly capitalized words: "Mary, Mary, Quite Contray(sic)", "How does your Garden (garden) grow?", "With loud yells and young Gals (gals),"


 * Rhyming: a number of these rhymes are also slanted/forced rhyme. (yells/gals) Finally this just feels like a rehashing of the nursery rhyme (which is creepy in its own right due to its mention of torture implements.) I'm sorry, but this is not up to our standards so this appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:06, August 30, 2015 (UTC)

My Mysterious Messenger
My story, was deleted within less than a minute, for not meeting the site's standard, I find this hardly to be true, since you can’t even read it fast enough, let alone have the ability to judge it’s quality. I would at least like to know what was wrong with it. For all I know, it could be formatting, grammar, spelling, who knows.


 * If we're splitting hairs, your story was actually deleted two minutes after being posted due to the large number of issues present in the story that were easily visible at a glance (proof-read please). When I deleted your last story, I mention the coding errors so I won't bring that up again other than to say that they were here again and due to the fact that I now have to sort through it, I won't be using as many examples as I usually do.


 * Wording issues: "I was a poor college student, living on his (my, you're telling the story in first person perspective) own for the first time." Redundancy issues: "we were able to get a small two bedroomed apartment, where we were (twice) able to live somewhat comfortably.". "Weather (Whether) being confronted by a crack dealer, harden (hardened) criminal". You shift from past tense to present. "But one night, I experience (experienced) something, that too (to) this day still makes me check over my shoulder once in a while.". "up and coming party." should be "up-coming". ""This can't be me, I mean yeah(comma missing) its (it's) my number, but I would never say something like this.""


 * Capitalization issues: "“Hey! Are you home?” I whispered in a harsh tone. “Yeah... What do you want?” He (he) slurred" Even when using texts, it still should be treated like a conversation and properly spaced out: "“Hey, do you remember those string of murders from a few months ago? I wonder if they ever caught the guy?” Growing a little annoyed, I quickly wrote back with “idk, but seriously, who's going to ride with us? i need to know soon, so I can notify the right people”."


 * Story issues: the story has been done a number of times before (see Penpal) and the rushed nature of the latter parts weakens the overall story. A lot of the plot/lack of description that I pointed out in the story you took from Reddit is also present here. I would strongly suggest using the writer's workshop next time as it could really help a story from being deleted and its appeal from being denied. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:59, August 30, 2015 (UTC)

Claire
Okay this story should havemet allt he quality standards, I can't understand why this was delted. There was good grammar, spelling, punctiuation, the story wasn't half bad and had a hidden side to it for anybody with a knowlege of mental health and half a brain. I'm just puzzled can somebody give me a proper reason this was deleted other than it didnt match the quality standards, yes but WHAT quality standard did it not meet, I spent a good while making sure it met all of them

Masterire (talk) 23:42, August 30, 2015 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry, but story was riddled with errors, punctuation (apostrophes missing from possessive words like neighbor(')s garden", commas missing from words indicating pauses in sentence flow, punctuation marks used incorrectly: ""Can you turn that flippin music off Bryan!(?)""), capitalization (failure to capitalize the start of a number of sentences, not being uniform when capitalizing mom as a proper noun, improperly capitalizing words: "That's when I noticed She was", etc) wording ("Bent upwards, shaking unnervingly." broken sentences, ), grammar (your=possession, you're=you are. it's=it is, its=possession "it's yellow paint", "it's tone", etc.), and story issues.


 * The author's mental track jumps around to random/unimportant thoughts, Claire's hatred comes out of nowhere and has no reason (explanation for these things are needed when writing a story), how was the mother killed so quickly/quietly (especially since there's written messages in blood (Cliche) that have dried. Your story needs a lot of work and it feels like you typed all of this without any proof-reading. Then there's the nonsensical ending that has zero build-up or reference in the story. There are a lot of issues here that drastically lower the overall quality of the story. Please read the quality standards as these are outlined in it and the writing guide link. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:44, August 30, 2015 (UTC)

Here is a revised version: https://www.wattpad.com/144921665-claire-part-one its alot better, can you read it and rethink your decision. I've also entered it into the writers workshop and im getting more advice from there Masterire (talk) 00:24, August 31, 2015 (UTC)


 * Re-making an appeal with only minor changes after not revising it fully was not a good decision. As I can't select messages from wattpad to point out the multiple other errors in example form: spelling, punctuation, capitalization, I'm afraid I have to turn down this appeal and only mention that I advise you to look at my message on your talk page and the writer's workshop for the issues I listed (and the ones I overlooked). The appeal is once again denied. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:32, August 31, 2015 (UTC)

okay, I've really fixed it up: https://www.wattpad.com/144921665-claire-part-one Masterire (talk) 20:21, September 1, 2015 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry, but seriously? A majority of the issues I pointed out earlier are still present as well as new ones:


 * The same grammatical errors: "it's yellow..", "it's tone", "Your acting..." it's=it is, its=possession. Your=possession, you're=you are


 * Punctuation: "Her eyebrows had seemed, (comma not needed) almost malformed.", "Please please just let me...", "Oh my god Ms.Ford(space needed), etc. "Like what!(?)", "Mom, why were there two of you.(?)" Apostrophes missing from contractions like "thats" apostrophes used incorrectly "...want's to lock me up.").


 * Awkward wording: "Confusion it seemed, was it?", "Lucia lived on my block, seated next to me at the middle of the bus.", "It kept going tighter until such a laceration was formed a stead flow of blood...". There are multiple fragmented sentences: "My skin so, so clammy.", "Laughing.", "Jeering." Typos: "What a lier. (liar)", "It was to (too) late."


 * Capitalization: "...where on the Planet..." "metallic sheers. he (He)", "As i (I) came...", "...last time, She (she) still", ""What?" She (she) asked...", etc. ) This appeal is being turned down for the final time. This is your third time appealing the same story and you aren't even fixing any of the mistakes that have been pointed out since the first appeal. This appeal is being turned down and any subsequent appeal will also be turned down due to the fact that this is the third time you've made me read the same story with only the slightest of changes. The appeal is for authors serious about improving their stories and getting them reposted. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:23, September 1, 2015 (UTC)

I tried, you cant expect em to get everything right the first time like im not some 30 year old professional horror author with boundless time, I've State Examinations coming up and stuff. I'll work on it and one day I swear to God I'll make a great one if it takes every last spec of creativity in my head, #goals #insperationalquotes #imonlyhashtagging2pissyouoff #dont take that seriously Masterire (talk) 20:30, September 2, 2015 (UTC)

Late Night Walks
I really think I've cleared most if not all my punctuation mistakes here. ( https://www.wattpad.com/163992065-tales-from-abraham-late-night-walks  this link is the revised version)  Please let this be right *fingers crossed*. I'm hopeful lol. All capitalization, hyphen/dash problems have been cleared up. the its/it's problem is mostly fixed, one or two strays are possible but I think I've got em all. I'd say capitalization issues are all fixed. The suspense is killing me lol.

Masterire (talk) 23:37, September 3, 2015 (UTC)


 * Early on, there's a wording issue in sentence three (I would highlight and copy-paste the text onto this appeal, but that's not allowed on Wattpad apparently). The first sentence in paragraph five has a period at the end of the dialogue, sentences like this should have a comma. Read this blog for help with punctuation around dialogue. CTRL+F to find these sections automatically. "woods with it's (its) flickering glow". "Bacteria" does not need to be capitalized. "They had forgot (forgotten) to wipe them". I'm not sure the lights being off at a ranger station is enough to turn them into a "very, very scared couple". I would think that the rangers may not be there at any time. As I'm reading, I'm getting the feeling of "this is the intense part" but the events don't match the description and the story falls flat. The appeal is turned down. I would advise reading our writing advice pages, style guide, and this guide.  SoPretentious 01:18, September 4, 2015 (UTC)

The Strings
Hey just had my Pasta deleted due to quality standards. It's my first post and I apologize as I didn't fully read the requirements before posting. I did leave in a few words in my submission which were recognized as misspelt, however they tended to be due to variations in English/American English from what I could see. Any further information would be useful as I'm not always too good with my writing skills so it's understandable if I've missed a few seemingly obvious points. Thanks, Edward Massey (talk) 03:43, September 4, 2015 (UTC)Edward Massey


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards, I suggest looking over that link as this is also the reason why I'm turning down this appeal.


 * Punctuation: all of your dialogue is missing punctuation. ""it wasn't me", "I tried to but it just wouldn't stop", "I have a lot of work to do with Billy, but for now I have to go"". Commas and apostrophes missing from pauses in sentence flow and contractions. "Great my kid(')s going...", "Well me and Alice (Alice and I) went into Billy's room to question him about it." Question marks missing from questions: "what (What) the hell do they have to do with anything.(?)". "gently "come (Come) join us daddy".(punctuation goes inside quotation marks)"


 * Capitalization: all of your dialogue lacks proper capitalization. ""we SAW you do it Billy"", ""why?"", ""has he ever said anything about the strings to you?"", etc. The start of multiple sentences are uncapitalized. "face. through his fingers I could a disfigured mess where his eyes should have been.", "what (What) the hell do they have to do with anything."


 * Story issues: the premise is rushed. Take the councilor for example. He literally says this: ""I don't(extra space uneeded) think Billy will be able to go back to school for a while. I have a lot of work to do with Billy, but for now I have to go"" What parent would accept that lack of explanation or curtness (especially when it involves their son's well being)? The story also has a lot of awkward/clunky wording. ":Wording: awkward phrasing: ""What strings?" butted in my wife before I could even open my mouth."" Then there's the ending: "If anyone is- We are all but puppets and he is our puppeteer. No one can stop the strings." It's a fairly Cliched ending to have the protagonist killed mid-sentence and an entity finishing the story. Why would they do this? For what purpose? It just seems nonsensical especially since the puppet master really has no motive or goal through-out the story. I'm sorry, but this needs a lot of work. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:00, September 4, 2015 (UTC)

"The Pirate Without Eyes"
I'm not going to try to get it back on the site, I'm only writing this because I do not have the pasta anywhere else. If it exists, I would like to just have the story to share to my friends. If possible I would like to know why it was deleted, it was my first attempt at a creepy pasta.

Thanks, --EnderBattle (talk) 21:18, September 4, 2015 (UTC)EnderBattle


 * Here is a copy of your story, that being said, the story was deleted for not being up to quality standards so the appeal is being turned down as well.


 * Punctuation. Hyphens missing from words that are connected: "over active", "re united", etc. Commas lacking from sentences that imply a pause in flow. "I told the "guards" (you need to explain why you're putting guards in quotations) about what happened that night and they said(comma missing) "That's why you're in here."" Apostrophes missing from contractions. "I was confused of (about) how I got here and just replied(comma missing) "Thats (That's) good..." "


 * Wording: "of corse (course)". "5 (Five) days later the entity I thought was fake and gone" is contradictory. Fake implies it never existed and gone implies it was there but is now not. Grammar: it's=it is, its=possession. ""it's" face finally,"


 * Story issues: the descriptions are fairly generic. "It had no eyes, it was like they were replaced by a dark eye-shaped object, I then passed out from fear." Side note: there needs to be a lot more build-up for the protagonist fainting as the pirate is visiting him every five days, why is this time so terrifying? "I was confused, a vortex? That sounds like an epsiode from this children's cartoon I saw on Cartoon Network." needs explanation. It seems like you really wanted a Candle Cove reference, but didn't want to elaborate on it. Finally, the ending is very lackluster. "I looked at where the walls meet and a vortex opened like last time, he ran towards me and faded away once again; and like last time, I woke up." It would come off as anti-climactic, but unfortunately, there's no suspense or tension in the story so it just feels unfinished. I'm sorry, but this story is not up to quality standards as there are numerous punctuation, wording, capitalization, spelling, and story issues. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:30, September 4, 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for giving me the story back ^-^ --EnderBattle (talk) 22:01, September 4, 2015 (UTC)EnderBattle

Unlocked Doors
Really really long time ago. Probably not by QS, as short stories aren't my element, but I tried.

read:4http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:457082

I may appeal again if denied. So sorry for bothering.

"In a war, it didn't matter how many lives I ended. It mattered how many of them I saved." 03:05, September 10, 2015 (UTC)
 * The story seems more like an introduction, it lacks intensity because right when it gets suspenseful, the lights flip on and the story is over. I'm left wondering what this entity is exactly. A story like this would be more interesting if it was drawn-out more. There's nothing wrong with it, but it comes off as generic. It needs more events.  SoPretentious 05:25, September 13, 2015 (UTC)

Deadly Ghost
I was wondering why my story is deleted, if why, I'm sorry it didn't met up to quality standards. I was just a beginner, but I was wondering if my story will be accepted back again. Here's my story in the link below, I fixed what was wrong in my story that one of the admins say in their contructive critism and fixed it. I hope you read it, thanks! Have a good day.

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:494263


 * I'm not going to go too in-depth with this as Banning already left a wonderful critique in the writer's workshop post and a lot of the issues he pointed out are still present. The story also has some massive coding errors that make the text difficult to read. Please use source mode when posting a story.


 * Capitalization: ""I'm sorry, I misspelled your name." He (he) said to the crying Marina.", ""Well, guess what? Class is starting. The teacher is coming any minute by now." The (the) green-haired girl changed the subject, so Izzy won't read her mind.", ""Izzy, what was that?" The (the) green-haired heroine asked.", etc.


 * Punctuation: "Who keeps a machete lying on the counter.(?)" You also forget to use commas a number of times where a pause in sentence flow is needed/implied.


 * Wording: "It creep her out, and it also happen to the boy in the movie. Do she have to listen to voice or ignores it?" You shift tenses from past to present tense a number of times and there is a lot of awkward wording. "She went back upstairs to check on the monster and saw that the wooden door that is holding off the monster was shredded holes that looked like claws caused the accident.", "She run as fast as she can and headed to the bathroom and locked the door behind her. She throw some salt at the front of the door unlike the boy in the movie.", "She starting to feel really pumped up when she looks at the rooms,", etc. I'm sorry, but if English is not your first language, perhaps it would be better to write in your native language and take it to the corresponding wiki. This story needs a lot of work. You are on the right track editing it, but there's still a lot more work to be done. I'm afraid I have to turn down this appeal as the story is not up to quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 16:25, September 13, 2015 (UTCz

A day off
My story was deleted because it's not matching the "quality stadards". I've checked the page and the only fail to these quality standard that I can spot is a wrong capitalization of my title (which I couldn't change).

So if you could reopen it and help me to work on what doesn't fit with the "quality standards", that would be really nice.

Mortaest (talk) 20:36, September 15, 2015 (UTC)Mortaest


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. For being only eight sentences long, a portion of these have punctuation and wording errors.


 * Punctuation: "She came back early this morning, exhausted(comma missing) but happy to have a day off.". ""Weird(punctuation missing)" she thought, "I don't think it's the season yet(punctuation missing)""


 * Wording: "She was leading (heading) to her bedroom when the phone rang.", "She just had the time to remember the straw on her front lane and think that she might not profit (awkward wording) from her day off..."


 * Story issues: The story is about eight sentences long and there are issues in at least half of them. That being said, even if those were corrected, the story feels very rushed and shares a similar premise to a number of other stories (that are more tense/descriptive due to their length and focus) like: Scarecrow, The Statue, and The Weeping Statue. I'm sorry, but I have to agree with Underscorre's decision to delete this. It is not up to our quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:52, September 15, 2015 (UTC)

Enter At Your Own Risk
I don't think it should of been deleted because I worked hard on it and made sure it was perfect before I posted it. I think it was deleted because I edited it to much or I described it too much.

SpawnOfSatan (talk) 13:36, September 16, 2015 (UTC) SpawnOfSatan


 * Your story was not up to quality standards, looking at your most recent edit, as you edited the story three times in the span of a minute, your story has wording, punctuation, grammar, and story issues.


 * Wording issues: "Suddenly, a feeling of dread impaled my chest as I reached out towards a decaying gate within the fence." You also shift from past tense to present tense during the story. From: "I start (started) by grabbing my backpack and packing some necessary items such as a torch and a notepad and pen.", "I see rusted doctor’s instruments.", and "I began to get scared as I stare at the cupboard." to past tense "I found a short cut in some woods near my house and began walking through them.". "I began to open my eyes and what I saw shock (shocked) me."


 * Repetition/redundancy issues. "I started to see the rusted fence. I started (redundant) running up to the fence(comma missing) wanting to see it properly with my own eyes." Awkward phrasing: "I tried to move and escape, but to my avail (to no avail) I was strapped against the cold, steel table." Even then, the sentence is still awkward to read aloud.


 * Grammar: "again.(should be a comma) "Whose (Who's) there?!" Whose implies possession, while who's is the contraction (who is).


 * Punctuation issues: Commas/semicolons lacking where a pause is implied/inferred. "As I was walking around the boarded up, vandalized building(punctuation missing) I refused to go inside,", "I grabbed my jumper and began walking down my street watching the neighbors cutting their lawns and kids running around in the gardens.", "Some dust got into my throat and I began coughing(comma) wishing I had bought some water.". Periods used in place of commas when opening dialogue: "myself. "I can do this(punctuation missing)"", "I thought "It must be just an animal(closing punctuation missing)"", " "I don't remember those being there" I whispered to myself."


 * Story issues: "As I looked around for a rock to try and break the lock, I noticed what looked like an entrance in the fence. I looked away and back towards it and it hadn't disappeared. I began to examine the entrance. It looked just right for me to crawl through." Why is the protagonist breaking into this building at all? You open with him walking down a road and coming to a building that 'impales their heart with dread', why would they enter such a building? You need to give their intentions, even if it is just morbid curiosity. We later find out it's a dream, but there is little reason for this and even less for the protagonist to be drawn to such a place after mention the dread it inspires in them.


 * Story issues cont.: The story feels very rushed (especially the second part) "What I saw was lots of insane people. I tried to blink, but I couldn't take my eyes of them all." There's little description here and less attempt to build suspense. Then there's the ending: "Update: tHreE YeaR noW… stiLL iN gOD forsAKEN PLaCE. wanT FamILy, wAnt moM… wanT To leaVe. DoOR LocKeD… BlOOd... being TreaTed… RooOm 1o9" You can imply that three years is the reason he's writing in alternating caps (although that still feels gimmicky), but there's still the lack of explanation and impact with this ending. This might have been an effective ending if the audience knew what he was experiencing during that time, but currently it feels like an abrupt ending to a story. There were a lot of issues in this story, I'm going to suggest taking your next project to the writer's workshop as there are quite a lot of issues here where you thought it was perfect. I'm sorry, but I'm turning down this appeal for the issues listed above. EmpyrealInvective (talk)

The Raiders Man
I honestly dont know why my pasta "The Raiders Man" was deleted. it is my first pasta and i understand that could be a reason. It was deleted 3 minuetes after post. I would like some advice to the changes i can make. Or if i can simply edit the post. Or just have it re-posted if this gets accepted. Thanks!


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. This is also why your appeal is being turned down.


 * Punctuation issues: Apostrophes are missing from almost every contraction. "I(')m one of the first ones", "I still don(')t think that much.", "Im freaked out.", "I dont know what to do.", etc. Words indicating possession need an apostrophe as well. "friend(')s window."


 * Wording issues: "My confused face turned into a traumitized face..." Awkward wording. "I anwsered (answered) but," "The closest things (thing) i (I) have to a weapon is a kitchen knife." Grammar issues: it's=it is, its=possession. "At least I think its (it's) empty.", "Its (it's) either you Aaron or Bradley.", etc. Capitalization issues: "I" needs to be capitalized. "Then i saw him", "when i saw the man in my friends window.", etc.


 * Story issues: the entries are very short and outside of the story comes off as odd. Why is the protagonist keeping this journal in the first place, and why is he focusing on the raiders man and giving his description: "He is bald, and in his 50's or 60's. I dont think much of him." Most personal diaries don't focus on giving physical descriptions for random people they meet on the street. Additionally this doesn't feel like a journal (especially when describing actions/events. "There was a knock at my door. I anwsered but, nobody was there. There was a paper on my door." These actions need the protagonist's feelings/emotions to be effective. Is he afraid, is he aware of the danger? These things build-up a story and make it involving. Without them, it just feels like a checklist of events.


 * Story issues cont.: The protagonist mentions this line: "As we got closer. I realized that something was Aaron. His lifeless corpse. In a body bag. (incomplete sentence)" So the raiders man is just standing outside the bus route with a boy's body in a bag, and no one is paying attention to him? It seems like a pretty large plot hole. Please look over this guide for assistance when writing journal based stories. I'm sorry but as it stands, this story is not ready for the website so the appeal is being turned down. I suggest using the writer's workshop (see deletion message on your talk page for a link) with your next story. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:00, September 17, 2015 (UTC)

Nova (LadyZephyrPheonix)
I am still very new here and not sure I understand all the rules but I would like to know why my story got deleted. I did fix a few grammar mistakes, also the word sclera means the white of your eye, but the word is almost never used so spell check always thinks it's spelled incorrectly. http://pastebin.com/gVtX2Vjw A link to my revised version, or at least revisions I could see needed to be done anyway. I would love to know what I can improve or if my story is just a lost cause and will never be up to snuff. Umm I also have mild autism not trying to play the pity card, it's just I might be missing a few rules and not even knowing it

LadyZephyrPheonix (talk) 05:20, September 18, 2015 (UTC)


 * Spelling/wording issue: "like the one person who's (whose) eyes".


 * Storyline issues: "Alexa watched her friends get dragged from the wreckage but before rescuers could reach her, fire had reached the gas tank, she died in the explosion that followed." There's missed intensity there, it seems like it happens too suddenly to get the right atmosphere, it just feels like it was thrown in there without much build-up. "That rage bound her to this plane as a Fire Demon." There's some missed intensity here also. Why is she bound as a fire demon? It seems like a plot driver, so there will be more intensity through exacting revenge, but without the right build-up it seems thrown in and too sudden. "Texting while driving, being one of the many things she saw that infuriated her." This just seems to push the plot also, being in there as a reason to further punish her murderer. These issues are early on in the story, which would make the story difficult to read, so the appeal is turned down.  SoPretentious 05:31, September 18, 2015 (UTC)

Melissa the Heartless
So I've been working on the re-written version of my story, I'm hoping that I've found all the issues that were previously in the story. However, sadly it’s not my strong point. I am more confident that I've found them all and fixed the issues within the story. Here is the link to the revised version: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:429348

I couldn't seem to get it to indent, apologizes about the wall of text.

IvyDarkRose (talk) 00:02, September 21, 2015 (UTC)


 * There's only a couple walls of text (paragraphs #5 and #16), but there's issues with the paragraphs, two speakers shouldn't be in the same paragraph. Stories on this site typically don't use indents except for excerpts. In that case, use "Excerpt goes here".


 * Wording issues: "I just lost in work", "He asks with a smiling", "looking at his daughter pained face", "his beautiful wife now disfigured mess", "Her face looked to be removed off its bone", "To his worse (worst) fears", "his mind last in a blissful cloud", "His freezes to a halt".


 * Punctuation issues: "then quickly brushes it off(.) "Must be her new imaginary friend" He (he) reassures to himself." These types of dialogues should have a comma and not a period, followed by a lowercase letter unless the next word is a proper noun.


 * The dialogue was a bit mechanical and took me out of the story. The constant clanging of the metal took me out of the story as well, I'm still not sure why it was part of the story. I'm also not sure why the police show up at the house. If the lady in the shack was the one that came back to make him and his family suffer, then why does the main character talk about holding her heart? As soon as she comes back in the story, I was left wondering whether she raised from the dead, or what could have happened with that. It's very anticlimactic. The appeal is turned down.  SoPretentious 00:57, September 21, 2015 (UTC)

2015
I'm not sure why mine was deleted, I was quite proud of it. I wrote the title and then changed my idea and then couldn't work out how to change the title but can i please know why it was removed?


 * The story was deleted for not meeting our quality standards as is why this appeal is being denied (as per the header).


 * Wording issues: you shift tenses. " I never had many friends, but it's not as if I cared" (past tense) to "It is a regular night. I'm in bed, on my phone, checking Facebook." (Present tense) back to "I told(additional space needed) her I would be over soon and hung up." (past tense) and then back to present tense ("The house is unlit inside.")


 * Capitalization issues: "That's when i (I) get the call.", ""Somebody is in my house, Harri." My (my) best friend says in a low voice."


 * Story issues: this story is very rushed and lacks a lot of description that would make it effective. Take the ending for example: ""Hello there, dear friend. Please, sit by me. I told you, somebody is in the house..."" This might be effective if the audience had an idea of what you were going for here. Instead, the only information we have is that she is sitting in the living room and laughing at the wall. There isn't much to go on here. I have to agree with SoPretentious, this story is not up to our quality standards so the appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 11:50, September 24, 2015 (UTC)

It is Time
Having examined the Quality Standards of this community, I am fairly certain my story meets said standards. It has a consistent plot, lacks/has very few grammatical issues, does not utilize cliches, and has a good amount of description, amongst other things.

Therefore, I do not feel that the Deletion of "It is Time" is justified, meaning it should be put back up.


 * The story was not up to quality standards. The standards do not solely focus on the mechanical aspects of writing as you are about to see.


 * Let's get the basics out of the way first. The title was improperly capitalized. "It is Time" should be "It Is Time". Additionally there really is no reason to triple space each line. It pads out the story and stretches it out. Punctuation issues: "It doesn't matter how often I go through this--I will end up taking these pills.", "My hand grabs the knob--it's ice cold.". These shouldn't be hyphenated and instead need an em dash.


 * Onto the reason why your story was deleted and this appeal is being turned down. Story issues. First things first, why is the protagonist saying everything aloud? ""I really need to take these pills.", "I can't stop taking these pills.", "Damn it!"" Who is he talking to? He knows he can't stop, so why is he expositioning so much about them? "I push the door open only to reveal what I had already seen." This needs more explanation. What are you implying with this line?


 * Story issues cont.: The story is very vague. While some mystery to a story can add a good atmosphere, a complete lack of explanation does not make for good story telling. When condensed down, the story becomes 'protagonist takes pills, it becomes dark.' This really doesn't do a good job building an unnerving or unsettling atmosphere. What little plot there is needs more explanation and build-up. As it stands, this story isn't up to quality standards due to story issues so the appeal is being turned down. I would suggest using the writer's workshop next time before uploading a story to get feedback for it before taking it to the site. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:43, September 25, 2015 (UTC)

bewithering deletion appeal
hi im bambo15 the writer of bewithering. this creepypasta has been banned 3 weeks ago and has been in writers workshop 2 weeks ago. i will write a new appeal if needed. i fixed and added on to the story to make it better. i saw at least 30 mistakes in my story not including the new content. i want to move on to a new story called puppet nashes poem but i need to get this one out there. so here is the link to my edited version of the story. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:496842 ~


 * I'm sorry but a lot of the issues I pointed out in the workshop post are still present. ("He broke threw the door using his head while screaming", "...lack muck oh my God they fell off!", "“Is that suppose to happen?”") as well as new ones like not using apostrophes to denote possession (doctors notes). I'm sorry but this story still falls well below our quality standards and a majority of the same story issues are present. Look over what I wrote on the writer's workshop post as I've already listed the issues once and don't want to clog up the appeal doing it again. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:15, September 26, 2015 (UTC)

Blue Billy Bob
I can't find rhe document with the content, but I only have one reason why my story shouldn't have been deleted. It didn't meet the standards, I know, but please, all I want is some feedback. This may sound like a stupid reason, and it probably is. If you can find any place that can house creepypasta feedback, please let me know.

Thanks

-Zach


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards which is also why this appeal is being turned down.


 * Punctuation issues: Commas missing where needed. "T-Shirts saying(') (")Save your family from boredom at Showbiz Pizza Place!"("), "The letters (")GAME OVER(") flashed on screen,". Punctuation missing from dialogue. ""I didn't program that"", "NO TOKENS LEFT", etc.


 * Story issues: The story is incredibly rushed and feels like an attempt to mash a haunted video game creepy pasta with a Five Nights at Freddy's story. It feels very rushed, lacking description, and sense of drama/suspense. I'm sorry, but this needs a lot of work and in its current form, it is not close to our quality standards, so this appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:07, September 27, 2015 (UTC)

Don't Open The Door

I dont know why this post was deleted, it is very well writen and is an orignal story with a good ending. I have dyslexia and if it was deleted due to grammer issues then shame on you. I did write this on MS Word and when I copied it over there was some random shapes that I couldnt remove. There is far worse creepypastas on here that have been writen so poorly that they make the crappypastas lists on youtube.

A quick response will the appreciated

Lee 09:12, September 28, 2015 (UTC)

Don't Open The Door
I dont know why this post was deleted, it is very well writen and is an orignal story with a good ending. I have dyslexia and if it was deleted due to grammer issues then shame on you. I did write this on MS Word and when I copied it over there was some random shapes that I couldnt remove. There is far worse creepypastas on here that have been writen so poorly that they make the crappypastas lists on youtube.

A quick response will the appreciate

Lee 09:39, September 28, 2015 (UTC)


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards issues. Having dyslexia is not a valid excuse since we have the writer's workshop where users can get help/assistance. There are multiple users with learning disabilities who post their stories there for help. Nor is not taking the time to work out the formatting issues. As for there being other low quality stories on the wiki, we are removing them as we find them and are doing our best to prevent other low quality stories (like yours) from being posted.


 * Wording issues: There are multiple massive run-on sentences: "It got to around nine p.m. and (I) decided to go for a shower as the humidity had made me rather smelly, I turned the shower on and waited for it to warm up that’s when I heard a noise as if someone was walking around on the landing, I opened the door and looked out on the landing and in the fading summer light there was just the three cats we owned, they all ran in to the bathroom which I didn’t mind as they would do this to anyone who was using the bathroom as if to keep them company.", "Right that’s it I thought and made my way to the window, I opened the window as much as it could go and stuck my head out to see how far away the drain pipe was, then I spotted movement out of the corner of my eye I quickly looked over to the garden and there was a dark shape of a humanoid creature with glowing green eyes was watching me, oh fuck oh fuck was going through my head as I tried to close the window again then I creature started to run to the house no doubt wanted to get to me before I closed the window, it was moving fast!", etc.


 * Wording issues cont.: Homophone issues: "the cats where (were)no longer hissing and was (were) now growling,". Spelling/typos: "the paramedics got my leg splinter (splinted) up", "Another week a (had) passed", etc.


 * Punctuation: dialogue not properly punctuated "“what the fuck is wrong with you lot(?)” I said,", "I shouted “are you back home love(?)”", "“who’s there(?)” I shouted"". Commas missing where a pause is implied: "999 what’s your emergan(even if you're cutting off a word, the part you do spell needs to be correct)….”, "“Honey why is the door locked, come and open it”,(commas go inside quotations)", "oh fuck oh fuck was going through my..."


 * Capitalization: dialogue not properly capitalized. “what (What) the fuck is wrong with you lot” I said,", "I shouted “are (Are)you back home love”"


 * Story issues: Your story is extremely generic. Take the creature description for example: "there was a dark shape of a humanoid creature with glowing green eyes was watching me" You don't build off this description at all so it comes off as very boring/flat. Plot holes: "I noticed deep scratches on the walls and big three toed foot prints on the carpets." So there's a break-in and no one questions the gigantic three-toed prints and the massive scratches on the wall? I'm sorry, but all of these issues cannot be overlooked. Your story falls well-below our quality standards and I have to agree with Underscore that it should have been deleted. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:03, September 28, 2015 (UTC)

The man
I think my pasta should be undeleted because I thought it was very good and I did not see any problems with it. Also it is my first creepypasta and I didn`t know what to do and thought I should just submit it and then wait for people to comment. Can someone tell me where to publish it and get feedback without it getting deleted. Also undelete it so I can copy it for the forums.

SomeXboxGuy (talk) 19:52, September 28, 2015 (UTC)


 * Here is a copy of your story, however, since it is not up to our quality standards, it can't be re-uploaded.


 * Wording issues: Tense shift from past tense to present. "Well it was night and the lamp posts barely light (lit) up the park."


 * Punctuation issues: "Well there was some sort of groaning noise." Punctuation missing from listed items (See below)


 * Capitalization issues: if you use an ellipse, you don't need to capitalize the next word unless it's a proper noun or the beginning of a new sentence. "A man...

White face... Black eyes... Holding a... Cleaver."


 * Story issues: there needs to be a lot more description here: "face: pure white, black eyes with red rings and a mouth which looked like one of those ventriloquist dolls." is very generic and sounds like a Jeff the Killer knockoff. Additionally the lack of build-up robs the story of any emotional impact you were looking for. "Them (Then) he pulled out a cleaver and without any emotion or noise, chopped my friend to BITS.". "I thought nothing of it as it didn't bother me (despite the fact that my friend had been butchered in front of me.) until I heard the description"


 * Story issues cont.: What news report gives this information (or lack thereof)?

"Origin: unknown(.) Alias: unknown(.) Body count: unknown(.) Last known location: un... known(.)" Additionally why the stammer/pause? The narrator is recounting the story, so why would they throw in that pause? It doesn't denote a dramatic moment or indicate the omission of words. I'm sorry but this really needs a lot of fleshing out and doesn't make much sense or explain the plot well. I agree with Jay ten, this story is not up to quality standards and needs a lot of work/fleshing out. I'm turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:35, September 28, 2015 (UTC)

Let us enter into agreement, Marissa Part 1
I am here to contest the deletion of my pasta. It was called "Let us enter into agreement, Marissa Part 1". It was a two part story, however, the part I uploaded was deleted on the grounds that it was unfinished (which is understandable, the story wasn't strong enough to stand on its own). I have totally rewritten the pasta in it's entirety, and posted it to the Writer's Workshop forum. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:500219  it is now a one part story, so I dropped the "Part 1" from the title. If you decide not to allow it back on the main site, please tell me what I can do to change that. Thanks. DarthWeezer1994 (talk) 21:53, September 28, 2015 (UTC)


 * The story was originally deleted for not meeting quality standards. Underscore later re-deleted it for being unfinished (which technically should have resulted in a ban). That being said, it was a good idea to take it to the writer's workshop, but it would have been much better if you waited for feedback as this story still has a number of issues.


 * Wording issues: "Carriker was a small town situated in Carriker County in Western New York." Stating Carrier twice comes off as a bit redundant) "Marissa Longley (Who would use a full name in hat scenario?)? Is that the ratty looking chic (chick) who always smells like she pissed herself?" There's a lot of repetition of names and it begins to feel repetitive. " Marissa knew Phillip Worthy was a guy who would never look twice at her. But he was so handsome Marissa could not help but stare at him." (in that paragraph you mention Marissa four separate times in a six sentence paragraph.). "I do this is because its (it's) …fun,” "


 * Punctuation issues: apostrophes missing from possessive words. "Sheriffs Office" Capitalization issues: as every sentence needs to be properly capitalized, avoid starting sentences with numbers. "3:00 dismissal could not come soon enough for Marissa.". "“Um…H-hi,” she stammered." While ellipses do work well in dialogue, the word after should only be capitalized if it is a proper noun or the start of a new sentence.


 * Formatting issues: Dialogue should be spaced out so two speakers are never on the same paragraph. ""Yup, that's the one," Sara laughed. Marissa came around the corner. Sara stepped in front of Marissa, barring her path. "Keep your eyes to yourself, you little bitch," Sara snarled. "I-I-" Marissa stammered." This is done to prevent misattribution and to remove large conversations from cluttering up a paragraph.


 * Story issues: a lot of the premise suffers from generic tropes found in a lot of OC/CPC stories. Abusive family: "her drunk and abusive father beat her. And while Dennis beat her, Carolyn stood in the background screeching insults at her.". Psychotic bullies: "So Sara decide it was time to put an end to this annoyance. She gathered Phillip and two Carriker linemen, Zeke Shoenfield and Bud Lake, to hatch a plot to put that creepy little Marissa Longley in her place.". Pact with a demon/Slenderman for revenge, etc. These really weigh down the story and weaken the ending as there really isn't much character development here. Additionally more description would help in some of the more action/horror oriented scenes. (A lot of the death sections seem lacking.) I'm sorry, but there are still quite a lot of issues with the story and it currently is not up to our quality standards due to multiple punctuation, wording, capitalization, and story issues so the appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:11, September 30, 2015 (UTC)

L'attaque.
This was my second pasta. I dont see why it was deleted. Could you have moved it to trollpasta instead? I want one of my stories to be knownSeminolesinger2003 (talk) 21:01, September 30, 2015 (UTC)seminolesinger2003

My pasta was called "L'attaque". This was my second pasta and i dont see why it was deleted. Could you have just moved it to trollpasta?Seminolesinger2003 (talk) 21:20, September 30, 2015 (UTC)


 * I would suggest looking at the first time I deleted your story. You still don't punctuation apostrophes. You still forget to capitalize "I". I'm not going to pull up examples again because they're the same issues (and there're also present above.)


 * The story is very nonsensical. " I am an ice cream addict. So losing ice cream is not that uncommon." Additionally proxy/slenderman stories are prohibited under the no spinoff rule due to their tendency to lack description (an issue present in yours) and the fact that a majority are very rushed. (Once again, this is an issue in yours.) There is little to no build-up here. So to sum up, your story was deleted for not meeting our quality standards.


 * As for taking it to troll pasta, they have open submissions over there, you can submit anything you want and don't need us to do that for you. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:25, September 30, 2015 (UTC)

Summersisle
I'm keeping this short, sweet, and to the point. This story was deleted by an admin for being against the ToS after THREE other admins gave me support and said nothing in it was breaking the rules in the comment section of the story. Futhermore, I wasnt even left a message AFTER it was deleted, which I am sure is against policy for moderators and admins to ignore.

I think this is completely unfair for one admin, I assume a bcrat, to just go over three other admins and delete a story with no warning or even the decency to leave a message after doing it.

Catstrings (talk) 02:27, October 3, 2015 (UTC)


 * No. It violates our ToU. Simple as that. If you want to post it somewhere, take it to deep web, they'll enjoy it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:36, October 3, 2015 (UTC)


 * I should also mention that those three admins admitted they were wrong in a private interaction and agreed it should be deleted on the grounds that it's basically child porn. LOLSKELETONS (talk) 02:38, October 3, 2015 (UTC)


 * We all came to the conclusion that it was better to delete it now rather than have to wait for Staff to notice it. It would not be the first time they have personally deleted something as graphical as that.  And the story they deleted was a real, published story, I believe.  It too had graphic depictions of underage sex.  ClericofMadness (talk) 02:40, October 3, 2015 (UTC)


 * ...maybe it qualifies as rubbing salt to the wound but the Admin supporters to the story admitted they hadn't even read it carefully. They had just skimmed it and somehow missed the details. But yeah, once the facts and quotes from the story were set in a discussion the voting was unanimous. --&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 02:48, October 3, 2015 (UTC)

The Ghost of the burned farmhouse
My story was deleted,but i going on the writer workshop to had help, it was a good same if he said it might be awful, but i was thinking it was good, i wanted to have my story to be accepted, and i really like to write and i was surprise tosee it was not accepted, i will do better and get help from the writer shop if its not perfect, i really hope my story will be accepted. Pierre1987 (UTC) 3 october 2015 ,23:10


 * See me response of Bennings' talk page for a reason. The story really had issues at the end and didn't really play out well. It was additionally lacking a description and the story really needed fleshing out. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:16, October 3, 2015 (UTC)

Deletion Appeal: The Nightlight
Hey Guys,

I went and revised my original story The Nightlight after it was deleted due to major formatting issues. I went ahead and made some tweaks to the plot, dropped a character and added a new one, and ensured that the formatting stays in a reasonable format. If you guys would go ahead and take a look at it, I'd love to know if it is publish-worthy.

They Who Open The Door


 * First things first, your story was actually deleted for not being up to quality standards and not for being improperly formatted. Underscore commented to that effect as did SoPretentious' deletion message. There were little to no formatting issues in the story. I would strongly suggest waiting for feedback next time you post to the Writer's Workshop instead of making the appeal so quickly as there're a lot of issues here that other users could have helped you smooth out before this appeal was submitted and turned down.


 * Format: The chat/forum layout needs some tweaking as using a series of numbers one after the other can be confusing and really doesn't reflect a good set-up. I'm going to overlook grammatical issues because I assume they were intentional in the story. Additionally you shift the layout of the chat/forum posts.:


 * "Mulder85: 10:30 PM; 10/10/2014 I believe your story, Phaser! :) Puck, why are you always so hostile?
 * PuckU: 10:50 PM; 10/10/2014
 * Not hostile, just rational. Phaser made the extraordinary claim, I didn’t."


 * Story issues: the epistolary (journal/letter/forum) format really doesn't work well with the story. (Especially during scenes in which the protagonist is explaining a lot of events. "My grief was interrupted by the sudden, high-pitched sound of some awful tool. My eyes shot back to catch a glimpse of this terrible thing which these long hands were ever so slowly moving to my chest. I could feel the heat coming off of it. I knew it was coming but I couldn’t move. I was truly powerless. I felt it touch, and my flesh gave way in the most searing pain I had ever experienced." This would be a lot more effective if it was being told actively instead of passively.


 * Story issues cont.: as I mentioned earlier, the layout seems off due to the fact that usually the user name has a colon and then their dialogue as opposed to putting the date and time between each one. Take a look at Funnymouth, Chat Room D, and other chat based stories.


 * Ending issues: "Mulder85: 5:20 PM; 10/27/2014 What the actual fuck! That’s gotta be a nightmare, Dawg.

PuckU: 2:24 PM; 10/29/2014 Jesus Christ!

MrE1986: 5:20PM; 10/29/2014 It’s all just a dream, right?!"


 * This really comes off as anticlimactic as all this information was posted on the original forum for everyone to see, so it seems odd that they would jump to conclusions and assume it's a nightmare/dream. (Especially after one character went so in depth talking about Don's experience, it just detracts from the overall quality of the story. I'm sorry, but there's still quite a lot of issues here. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 11:48, October 6, 2015 (UTC)

Micro-Pasta Collection Page
About a year ago I went through a phase of contributing several (highly praised) micropastas to this wiki. I recieved a lot of support through the "World's shortest micropasta" thread I created in the Writer's Workshop (link: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:410607 ) as well as in chat and the comments' section of each individual story.

All was well until one day, months after they'd been uploaded, I woke up to discover all my micropastas had been deleted.

Frustrated, I took a long break from this wiki, and didn't return until eight months later (a couple days ago). That's when I decided to take the advice (as seen in the aforementioned thread as well as my talk page) of Empy the admin to upload all my micropastas into one page, creating a short stories list like he did (link to his short stories list: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/EmpyrealInvective's_Collection_of_Short_Stories ).

I named my new page "ColorlessAngelz' Micro-Pasta Collection", and in addition to bringing back my older successful micropastas, added in a couple new ones. Since I had recieved some kind words from admin Underscorre after my previous departure, I decided I would tell him about my new upload and my intent to finally come back and resume contributing to this wiki.

He deleted the story approx. 30 mins later for the reason "it seems like an excuse to reupload deleted stories" and blocked me for two days.

After I was unblocked, I left him a message on his talk page explaining myself. The following is an excerpt from my (rather annoyed) comment on his page explaining why my new page shouldn't have been deleted:

"My recent upload wasn't "an excuse to reupload deleted stories." It was an idea to combine all my micropastas into one list that was pitched to me a long time ago Empy the admin... My stories were taken down (allegedly) because, as short stories, they weren't quite strong enough to meet the standards on their own, not because of legitimate lack of quality. Therefore, putting them all together, like Empy did with his short story list, should more than suffice for acceptance on this wiki.

Think of it like this. Would Empy's short story "Pillow Talk" (I loved how my wife used to wake me up by whispering sweet nothings into my ear every morning. I didn’t enjoy her pillow talk as much the day after her funeral.) get deleted if he posted it as a stand alone story? Unless there's some kind of admin bias, yes. However, his story is accepted on this wiki because he grouped it together on the same page as several of his other short stories. This is the same thing I did. Therefore you should either delete his short stories page because the individual stories aren't all enough to stand alone like you did with mine, or you should have never removed my micropasta collection and blocked me in the first place." (End of excerpt)

I'm sure asking for an apology for the two day ban is too much, so I'll simply ask that you please reupload my micropasta collection page.

(PS: Tried fixing my signature on both visual and source editor and it won't work. This is ColorlessAngelz. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_talk:ColorlessAngelz )

~


 * Fun fact, when I told you that, I was referring to new stories and not previously deleted stories. It would be counter-intuitive to allow users who had stories deleted for not meeting quality standards to bunch them all together and assume they'd pass. Read the deletion and reuploaded page messages on your talk page for a refresher. The deletion appeal last time was denied and since there were little to no changes to the stories, this appeal is also being denied. Underscore was correct in deleting that page and blocking you as you violated the rules.


 * And for further clarification, I also posted all my stories together (much like SnakeTongue did) so users could find them all in one spot and not because I assumed that they were low quality and couldn't stand on their own. I realize that there are some that don't appeal to everyone, but I'm fairly certain all of mine make the cut. I actually have a number I didn't post here because I felt they didn't meet the cut. So yeah, you're likely not going to get an apology for violating the rules and getting banned and this appeal is being denied for the obvious reasons stated above.EmpyrealInvective (talk) 15:45, October 11, 2015 (UTC)

Sleep Can't Wait Forever
I believe my creepypasta, Sleep Can't Wait Forever, should have never been deleted. It was deleted for low-quality, despite the fact that there was no punctuation or grammatical errors. It was an original, creative, inventive story, and one that had been worked hard on. I properly capitalized the title and the first letter of all sentences, as well as the letter I. The plot was consistent and didn't use any cliches. For these reasons, I believe my story should not have been deleted.


 * I'm sorry, but looking at this story, it doesn't meet our quality standards. There are multiple redundancy, wording, grammatical, typos, and story issues that reduce the overall quality of it. I would suggest taking your next story to the writer's workshop (see deletion message) for feedback and assistance as your insistence that there weren't any issues when there are quite a few is not the best starting point for working on a story.


 * Wording issues: "I hadn't a clue of what the knife was doing, but what really struck me as eerie was the fact that the knife (redundant) seemed freshly sharpened and cleaned, but I hadn't recalled sharpening(redundant) it any time within the last several months." Avoid reusing the same words multiple times as it comes off as repetitive. Awkward wording: "I was burnt up in fury the next day for believing that, for even one second, that (the) knife could move on it's (its) own.", "My throat throbbed, full of that feeling like there's a lump in your throat right before you begin to cry.", etc.


 * Grammar: it's=it is, its=possession. "that knife could move on it's (its) own."" Typos: "I it (sic) down on my lower lip to stop from sobbing...", "I can postpone m (my) fate and prolong my sorrow, but I can't deny my fate. " "After all, sleeping can't wait for ever (forever).", etc.


 * Story issues: the premise is incredibly unbelievable. How is the killer planting weapons in the protagonist's hand and getting him/her to grasp them without waking them up. Then there's this: "In two weeks ("Two weeks later", as you are telling this in past tense while 'in two weeks' implies future tense more than past.), I woke up with a lighter blazing in my hand, nearing my leg. I began to whimper as the lighter flickered off." How did the killer get the lighter going, and make it so the protagonist was bringing the lighter near their leg? Then there's moving them to the bridge (without waking them), getting them to grasp the railing, etc. I'm sorry, while this is an interesting premise, the execution needs a lot of work. This feels very unpolished due to the abundance of wording, spelling, grammatical, and story issues. As it stands, this story is not up to our standards and I agree with Underscorre's decision to delete it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:34, October 12, 2015 (UTC)

My Dad's Razor
Several days ago I submitted this story as a Creepypasta and it was deleted because it violated quality standards. I believe I have revised it to a satisfactory state that is within standards. I tried to keep all the paragraphs spaced and shorter, and corrected the grammatical mistakes pointed out to me. The newly edited version is here (http://pastebin.com/uSD5Kcts) on pastebin.

FFrooton (talk) 18:36, October 17, 2015 (UTC)FFrooton


 * The father seems deranged, and I'm not sure there's much to ponder about the fight that causes his death, which makes the ending anti-climactic. Why would he feel guilty about killing in his father in self-defense? The early stages of the story seem rushed. Paragraph #4, for example, incorporates too many ideas and the impact would be much greater if these topics were described in more detail, or left out. As it is, it seems brushed over, and not leaving much impact.


 * This seems rushed: "Each day is a struggle just to wake up and convince myself that I deserve to live after that day, or sometimes I wonder if I did the world a favor." It goes from one end of the spectrum to the other, so it's not leaving much impact and comes off as anti-climactic. It would be better if there was some event or "hook" to cling to as a reader with these emotions. The appeal is turned down.


 *  SoPretentious 08:51, October 20, 2015 (UTC)

Down below
I feel like my story had no errors. I looked at it and there could hardly be any errors on a 2 sentence creepypasta. It is also on the writer's workshop here: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:501060#15

AnXboxDude (talk) 12:38, October 18, 2015 (UTC)


 * This style has been done too many times now, and is nearly impossible to pull off. Scratching is very similar in that there's a scratching, which would be the screaming in this instance, and then a sudden realization makes that noise frightening.  Another issue is that not having a basement has nothing to do with why this scenario would be scary: if screaming is coming from anywhere in the house it means something really bad is happening.  If you heard unexplained screaming coming from your basement, would that not be just as bad?  There's very little difference between someone being in your basement and someone being in your crawlspace.  I know you likely didn't know this was a common concept, but that doesn't have any impact on whether or not we allow something on the site or not.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 13:19, October 18, 2015 (UTC)

Mel
I upoaded the story Mel and it ended up saving as a wall of text. I was trying to edit and fix the formatting error wen it was deleted. If It where alowed to be reuploaded I would fix the formatting error.


 * There were more issues than just the story being one large wall of text. This is why the appeal is being turned down due to the story's punctuation, wording, capitalization, and story issues.


 * Wording errors: "The Boston skyline was mostly dark and the streets where (were) about as quiet as they ever are in a big city.", "The only reason I was out was because of a study session that had ran (run) much longer then it was supposed to.", "Where (Were) it not for the time of night and the large smile", "Did not even appear to breath (breathe),", "She was probably just a film student form Emerson", etc. There are a lot more of these issues present, but there are other issues present in the story so I suggest reviewing/proof-reading your story more thoroughly next time.


 * Fragmented sentences: "Here I stopped.", "Looked up and looked (redundant, consider revising) back", etc. Capitalization issues: "“Why you up?” She (she) called to me.", "So, If (if) you ever see a girl with a wide smile..."


 * Punctuation issues: "“I just got back from studying with Josh,(.)”", "“Hey, Emily You need to get up, you have work in an hour,(.)”", "“Get up,”" There is no proceeding sentence after that line so it should have conclusive punctuation. "The words (")WHY YOU UP?(") where (sic) gouged into every part of her skin."


 * Story issues: I'm sorry, but this is a pretty cookie-cutter storyline and the lack of description/generic descriptions ("She was small, skinny with a face obscured by curly black hair. She was dressed in dark skinny jeans, and a green sweatshirt that was covered in cats.") The story needs quite a bit of work and really feels like a carbon-copy of The Grinning Man in its premise. I'm turning down this appeal as I feel like Jay was correct in deleting this one for not being up to quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:23, October 20, 2015 (UTC)

Dead Sleep
I really feel like my story was berated by some admin. I personally believe they don't understand that my piece is suppose to be informal, (like talking to a friend). The protagonist of my story is a madman so it should be a little inconsistent. It's not fair that I put all my work into a piece to only have it removed minutes later. LIZBAC (talk) 00:55, October 22, 2015 (UTC)


 * To the admin about to review this, here is a list of the issues that were present in the story for your review. EmpyrealInvective (talk)


 * Your story failed to meet our quality standards. Starting with the basics, a large portion of it had coding and formatting issues


 * " For about 20 years the CIA was conducting all Dead Sleep.jpg

these unethical human experiments involving hypnosis, use of psychedelic drugs like LSD, and torture to obtain information from future political prisoners. " that cut off sentences mid-paragraph.


 * That would have resulted in it being "Marked for Review" until those could be corrected were it not for a larger number of wording (misspellings, tense changes from past to present, starting multiple sentences with conjunctions, etc), punctuation (overuse/incorrect use of ellipses, incorrect use of commas, periods missing from abbreviations, Quotations being used when there are no intervening actions. ""Her brains will be splattered all over my hands." "Yes, I can hang her intestines like it's tinsel for a tree."", etc.), capitalization (not capitalizing proper nounsm capitalizing words that don't need to be capitalized. "He just laid there.... Motionless." An ellipses is used to indicate a pause and the following word, unless it's a completely new, non-fragmented sentence or a proper noun, shouldn't be capitalized.), and story issues


 * Story issues: there's quite a disconnect between the science of the experiment and realism: "inject him with some amphetamine to make the guy start talking." (amphetamines, a class of drug, aren't like truth serums and have no effect on truthfulness.) There's also issues with the protagonist shifting between sounding scientific " Other than Subject 8's bizarre outburst the other day, they received no substantial data." and being nonchalant: "Could one weird moment have(extra space unneeded) seriously gotten those brainiacs excited?" It really could use some more scientific backing for believability as it currently seems to have/overlook a number of issues.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 01:01, October 22, 2015 (UTC)

Contesting: The Mourning Star
== The Mourning star ==

I believe the reason for 'not meeting standards' was that the editor oddly deleted all my paragraphs and formatting, but I have since then formatting it correctly. Hopefully the story is now up to standards.

This is my first time on a wiki, so pardon my failure at using the site

DekktheBlackVector (talk) 17:56, October 26, 2015 (UTC)


 * I suggested you use the writer's workshop for feedback to correct the issues that were beyond the formatting. As these issues have not been resolved, I'm afraid I'm going to have to turn down this appeal until they are. Here are a few of the issues that are present:


 * Coding issues: "I made a contract with the morning star. In other words, I made a deal with the devil. No, I don't mean it metaphorically, or really literally either. It's... complicated.   The star did exist, but he didn't take the form of a monster. No, it also didn't take the form of a man, either. It was, like the name suggested, a star.   " Is on every paragraph. Switch your editor to source mode to remove these.


 * Formatting issues: ""Hello there." He had 'said.' "How are you on this fine morning?" "Fine." I remember asking. "You'd like to be happy?" He (he) asked.", " "Hey, can you just press that sidewalk button? Over there." "The one that turns the light?" I asked.", etc. Multiple lines of dialogue should not be in the same paragraph as it muddles who is talking and who is responding.


 * Capitalization issues: ""Let's make a deal. A contract. You get to be happy, forever, as much as you want, in return for some favors." He (he) said.", ""No." He (he) said.", ""Release them." He (he) said.", etc. Improperly capitalized words: "...become america's (America's) next top singer or something.", "stop. 5 (Five) dead.", ""Is... Is (is) it over?"", ""N-No (N-no)!" I said."


 * Wording issues: "citing that event his his (sic) suicide letter.", " the roar of a minotaur-esc" (minotaur-esque) Grammar it's=it is, its=possession "it's tip"


 * Punctuation issues: "I had closed my eyes, and simply wished upon a star "I want to be happy."" There are still a number of issues present in the story that need to be resolved. If you edit the post, and message me the corrections, we can post it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 18:10, October 26, 2015 (UTC)

Hex
So I posted my story and it got taken down for not meeting the "quality standards." I'm not exactly sure as to why, I skimmed over my copy of the document (the .docx) a few times for any possible errors, but I didn't find any. So again, I'm not sure why it was taken down. I'd like to have it's deletion appealed and put back up please.

19:09, October 27, 2015 (UTC)


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. Starting with the basics, don't indent paragraphs as it causes formatting issues. Additionally you need to break up larger paragraphs so they are 5-10 sentences.


 * Capitalization: "“And here I thought I'd truly achieve the ecstecy of time travel.” He (he) added sarcastically.", "“Hit that shit Hex.” It (it) whispered.", ""Nope!” He (he) answered. “Not now, and trust me not ever.” He added" Additionally 'he added' is not needed as it's a continuation of his dialogue and you already set that he was answering. etc.


 * Punctuation: commas missing where they are needed to indicate dialogue/a pause in sentence flow. "“Yeah well-!”" Additionally a hyphen indicates an interruption and renders the exclamation point useless. "“Well what do we have here?”", "“Fuck, fuck fuck fuck fuck fuck!”" Apostrophes missing from possessive words: "Hectors rib cage", "“Hey Nate, how was it.(?)”"


 * Wording: "word reches (reaches) them", "He spoke to himself in a hushed, gorggy tone.", " with hus fingers tried to organize his long", "placed it in (on) the counter", "mind boddled (boggled) for a moment.", "Out of no where (nowhere) his instincts kicked in," Grammar: it's=it is, its=possession "Either way it's starting to taking it's (its) toll."


 * Story issues: "“Ugh…can’t it be Friday already..?” He complained to no one in particular. “Not a chance.” A female voice responded." Multiple lines of dialogue should not be on the same paragraph. The story falls victim to a lot of the common tropes of OC/CPC stories. Bullied teen, fights off bully, snaps, mutilates themselves, and murders them later. I'm sorry, but this is a Jeff the Killer knock-off and has multiple issues with it. I'm turning down the appeal for the reasons outlined above.EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:31, October 27, 2015 (UTC)