Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20190419171712/@comment-9041013-20190420165316

You want to stop drinking? get Gastritis... you'll never want to touch the bottle again. Absolute hell, imagine the worst stomach ache of your life, multiply that, add neusea and harsh vomitting. Fuck.

Anyway, as for the story, I'm pretty certain DT's aren't very common, it's supposed to be occuring mostly in "you're about to die from organ failure" levels of alcoholism. Alcohol hallucinations not stemming from DT's aren't as common either from what I know. Thing is, if you get to DT's you are in a very high risk of dying without treatment; something between 20-40% mortality. Thus, how come he was never admitted to a hospital? That's odd. I assume you're talking from previous personal experience which probably ended pretty quickly in hospitalization. So, odd detail there.

I kind of didn't feel it, at all. The whole thing didn't help me relate or feel his suffering. It's like I'm being told that he suffers not shown it. Maybe it's the way you've described things... I don't know... call it a gut feeling.

Other than that, the plot is fine.

The English needs a bit of work though as Bob said.