Talk:Spider Cannibals/@comment-25558572-20140629033903

This pasta was quite well-written, particularly for a journalpasta.You did a good job of describing the protagonist's feelings throughout it, and although the ending was somewhat unsurprising, I found it to be realistic and, therefore, believable. You also have good use of vocabulary and description- it really does read like a journal, adding to the scare factor.

Overall, the only thing I would change about this pasta is perhaps altering the ending into something unexpected, but nevertheless, this is a fairly impressive story.