Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20151213010850/@comment-25941663-20151215215815

Thanks for the feedback and thanks for spotting those errors.

I will try and give some bits of backstory here and there and I will try to make the situation seem a bit more dangerous.

I'm not sure though how to go about the ending. I agree it needs some fixing, but I may need some time, as I don't want to give away what the "bad guy" is.

Would you mind if I came back to you in a couple of days with an improved (hopefully) version?