Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29164101-20160719174208/@comment-27008899-20160719183452

Pretty interesting. Just a few continuity issues. "The most prominant..." I would have gone with disturbing, but you never tell your reader what was on the floor.

How could the investigation end after seemingly a short time if he is still at large?

Awkward structure and wording: "I knew Jonn was a freak..." Followed by "I thought he was cold..." Consider revision: "I knew John was a bit of a freak and he often came across as cold. I underestimated him. He was more heartless than any of us could imagine."

"I dint see frustration or fear..." Consider switching this one up: "The last time I looked into his eyes all that was left of the friend I once knew was a void. No fear or frustration, but a black-hole where emotion was supposed to be.

Your final line "He was never my friend." is obvious to the reader.

Overall its not a bad story, and a decent first draft. Put a little thought into your wording, add some description to make your reader see what you see, and overall else never state the obvious to the reader.