Talk:Barbie.avi/@comment-28392588-20160512084422

Kind of seems like the protagonist gets easily spooked over nothing.

"God save my soul."

Why would you say that after watching an apparently spooky video. Like, if something unexplainable or straight out paranormal wouldve happened afterwards, i wouldve understood. But the way it is right now it just feels out of place...

"That’s when I heard something moan really loud, and that’s when I jumped the fuck out of the second story window and ran back to the tracks."

Thats when i thought that this sentence sounded a bit repetitive.

All in all its ok. There are better things out there, but the Writer clearly tried