Talk:Miranda/@comment-25070750-20140804105640

I liked the pasta. I have a daughter named Miranda. Thank goodness she's not like that! I think you just need to work on your writing a little more. At the beginning of the story, you used the word "something", I believe it was four times in two sentences. You want your stories to flow. Maybe read them out loud, see how they sound. That sometimes helps with sentence structure and run on sentences. But I like the concept behind your pasta. =)