Talk:Love of the Queen/@comment-5733573-20180531154200

It's an interesting story, but it's a little inconsistent. The beginning and ending don't quite sync up, and it takes a turn into diary territory somewhere in the middle. These things are fairly easy to clean up, though, and once that's done, this will be a really strong pasta. I like the narrator a lot and the relationship with the doctor is ultra creepy. Nice work overall.