Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20150302110545/@comment-25941663-20150302192025

I found a small mistake: "things head" -> "thing's head"

Also, near the end, I thought that Lily was facing away from the window. Then you write that shards hit her face. Is this an oversight, or am I missing something?

Those few technical bleeps aside, I enjoyed this one. It was short and sweet, with some creepy moments. Your writing was consintent and I had no trouble following the story. The ending was also good, although I am not entirely sure what happened. In this case, I think this is a good thing.

My only complaint is that this wasn't consistently creepy. Also, the character's aren't that fleshed out, even though in a short story such as this it isn't that big of a problem.

Overally, this is an enjoyable read, although it could have done with a bit more horror. Well done.