Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25150178-20140707151921/@comment-25150178-20140707212710

Thank you both for your input. I will say that perhaps my intro was a tad misleading. I am not a creative writer in that I haven't written a creative piece in 5 years, and that was a school assignment. I have taken both reviews into account and will post the revised copy soon.

I suppose my initial thought for using second person was to attempt to get into the reader's head. That line of thinking also went into my use of the present tense