Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180319132312/@comment-9041013-20180326000623

Kolpik wrote: Ok, the blurred narration was a worry of mine. I still intend to work on this story a bit, but I wanted some feedback, so thanks. I figured I stepped on a cliché, but I don't think clichés always need to be avoided. They don't usually explode. Most of my stories probably do and will have some slight comedic part or two in them. It's just how I write. It is something I'm working on, because sometimes I am trying to be serious (not in this story). So, "She's right, Carl, I'm dead." stays in the story. LOL! Thanks for the *winks* and the feedback. I think you should stick to one type of narration, either first person, or all knowing narrator, otherwise it gets convoluted and confusing.

I think I should explain why it works so well, the dark comedy thing in horror (like the Scream movies, or Freddie Krueger's characteristic quirks) it's because whatever is inappropriate for the situation usually seems off, to the point of becoming scary or causing phobia. Fear of clowns is is caused by their precieved constant jolly appearence, which would be off, if there's nothing funny around, it's just sick that someone is smiling none stop.

Think about this for a moment.