Talk:Hangin' With Leo VHS Transcript/@comment-37793868-20181212083750

I know this story is pending deletion, but I wanted to throw out some quick recommendations to the author if they were actually invested in this posting and wanted to improve. First, move away from the transcript format. While it's interesting that you found an actual piece of relatively forgotten media and made edits to make it appear creepy, the current format the story is presented in makes it difficult for the reader to immerse themselves. To do this, the easiest path I feel you could take this story in would be going the route of the narrator buying or renting the movie as they like Leonardo Dicaprio and were interested in watching a documentary on him, only to find out that the film they got isn't exactly what it appears at face value. I know this is an overused trope, but done well, it could potentially lead to a relatively interesting story.