Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27007772-20140924012650/@comment-27007772-20140927175317

Fatal Disease wrote: I would fix the wall of text on here so that it can be the two paragraphs that you wanted. Once you post a thread you can edit it whenever you like.

After The Sun hardly up, there's some missing letters that makes your sentences awkward and weird.

"he wooden back door of the isolated house slowely opens with the wind..."

What I think you meant was "The wooden back door of the isolated house slowly opens with the wind..." There are some sentences like this where you missed a letter or misspelled a word.

I think I like the intro of the page that you posted two days ago a lot better than this. The story is officially posted, and available on my profile.