Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27102599-20151021182907/@comment-26475800-20151021184209

This was deleted because there isn't much of a story here. It just talks about John hating his job, which is only known because of the title. There is no action, horror, or really anything to this story. Sorry to be so harsh about it, but it needs some meat to it.

This would be like, the first paragraph to A Tale of Two Cities being the entire story. It leaves you so confused, and unsure what was happening. It is fine to be vague, but you still have to give some data on what is happening. If I was taken to this story via the random page button, I would have no idea what the hell it was that I just read. That is not what you want your readers to feel like.

If you want to make it vague, do so, but still give enough info so the reader has an idea of what is happening.