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This is my recent story I made it is oringinal content

Hello. I am a witniss of a man named Bob's possesion. I know the stuff that happened because before he was possesed, while he recruited me he told me of what happened. This is how the story goes.

One day this man(who is also named Bob)'s grandma got possesed from a demon from what I call Amarande  (means immortal in greek.) He was kidnapped but made it out. A detective named Alec (who literally is a smart Alec) interviewed Bob. Alec, Bob, and John (Bob's assistant) went to the hospital. "Well, we're here" Bob said as the car arrived to the hospital. He took cautious steps as he walked up to the place of one bad memory. He looked at the door. WELCOME the door said. Bob reached out for the doorknob and turned it. He pulled the door open. The air was chilly. Bob felt if he were alone. But Alec and John were there to keep him company. The place was abandoned, but there were lights on.

Bob stepped into a stairwell. He, Alec, and John walked upt to floor seven. He saw blood coming out from under door six. "What the fuck" Bob said. Bob opened the door. He cringed as he saw a naked women with her arms torn off. She look- ed like Jeff the Killer. She had a smile carved in her face. One of her nipples were severed. She was bruised and her arms and legs looked like how when you cut a hotdog open. She had her eyeballs out of their sockets. (Sorry for all the gore.) Bob was freaked out and threw up a little. Alec indentified the corpse. " She's Amanda Krokahve." Alec said. They exited that room to a room seven. John was pulled to the side by Amarande and tortured/murdered. It was Bob and Alec all alone. Alec tells Bob, "We need to get the fuck outta here." Bob says " Okay, I'll be glad to." They run out and start up their car. They drive to the city. The car breaks down. Some tourist named Raleigh and Kathrine asks if they can help them. Bob and Alec accept.

They get in Raleigh's car (which is a Cadillac.) They drive to the hostpital. Bob tells Raleigh to get his gun. They enter the hospital. They find Amarande (Bob's posessed grandma.) She attacks and Raleigh shoots her. Causing her to posess Raleigh. Amarande kills Kathrine. Amarande (which has Raleighs gun) shoots Bob in he stomach. Alec and Bob are trapped in. Bob finds a key to the door. Alec gets tortured to death. Bob is about to unlock the door when he gets shot in the shoulder blade. Bob collapses and gets dragged to Amarande's torture room on the first floopr. Cops broke in and arrest Raleigh and rescued Bob. Bob gets sent to the Baldemor Hospital.

For 3 months Bobs stays in there. On the last day he is sent to court. He is found innocent. Then Amarande breaks the courtroom's door, and kills the judge and the gaurds. Bob escapes and recruits me. Amarande is back in her hospital. Bob and I investigate. He gets possesed by her and I get the fuck out of there. That is what happened on April 30th 1995. More people have told me stories about her. I will edit another story when I get the chance.

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