Talk:The Neighbor in the Black Hood/@comment-9780519-20140402160555/@comment-9780519-20140403232605

I missed the part about the uncle's house, but it still doesn't explain what happened to all the dead bodies that were in the kid's house. And why all the dead bodies were even in his house.

"The boy in the hoodie. The Neighbor. The same neighbor in the dark hoodie. The Neighbor in the black hood. This time he had a knife in his left hand." You still gave him a knife. And you could have picked anything besides hoodies. Hoodies aren't even relevent to the times. Hoodies have been around for a long time. Whether you meant to or not, you still have a killer that has several similarities to Jeff.

I get what you going for, but it's honestly not needed. It's like when a little kid gets excited and they use every adjective they can think of. Plus it's sloppy because as I mentioned, lifeless and dead mean the same thing.

Again, I get that was what you were going for, but it's not needed. If their friendship played a more vital role to the plot (the way it does in Penpal) I would see how all of that would be neccessary. But establishing their friendship has nothing to do with the story.

I get that it is him retelling the story, but it ends with him seeing faux-Jeff at the end; faux-Jeff kills people. Either the narrator was killed by the killer and it makes no sense that we're reading his story, or he got away and some detail should be given to how he got away.

I believe it could be coincidental, but now thinking about it, the killer is about to do the last kill of the story, and he gives a catchphrase. "Looks who's here" similar to Jeff saying "Go to sleep". I'm just saying these are things you should think about with your story. Teen killer - hoodie - he did have a knife - and he has a catchphrase as the last line before the implied final killing of the story.