Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180503165213/@comment-35447404-20180505154622

BloodySpghetti wrote: I can't seem to grasp at why you're stopping there, it just goes "that, this moment is when I came to..." there's no comma, no period, nothing to stop over and a few words later it is explained that he realizes what is true fear :))) If I may sugest, I think the phrase woud read better like this: "Oh, boy! This is the moment when I truly came to understand what it is like to be terrorized". Just giving my two cents here. If you like your version better, its your story, your rules. Sorry to keep bringing stuff up, its just what I do...