Board Thread:General Wiki Discussion/@comment-38131007-20190225132151/@comment-9041013-20190226131025

Well you should post this on the workshop, not here.

As for the story, it has a bunch of potential to be a suspence piece about some cheeky trickster spirit getting its kicks out of scaring people. For that you'd have to build up the plot where this being slowly "picks on" the pratagonist upping the ante from say gusts of wind to shadows to voices to eventually fully appearing to the pratagonist.

This would have to be far less tell and a lot more show, let thr audience figure out that the events are unnatural.

Also, you hsvr to work on your English