Talk:A Bedtime Story/@comment-25477067-20150831172529/@comment-25148755-20150831182021

For me it wasn't the words themselves that were jarring, just that they felt a bit forced a few times in their usage. You've read enough of my stuff to know I have no predilections about dipping into the proverbial vocabulary well if the style or situation calls for it. That being said, a few phrases (immediately coming to mind is "...I would befall to pneumonia eventually due to my exposure, why on earth would the cold of night be excluded from the disillusioned hypothesis?") seemed unnecessarily thick.