Talk:Headhunter/@comment-26091579-20150209203158

Not bad for a first pasta, I'm quite new myself.

This seemed like an adversitement for Mountain Dew and Netflix. Jokes, but maybe say soda and TV next time, instead.

Seriously though, my biggest gripe with this is the unrealistic actions and thought process' of the protagonist. After seeing a strange humanoid outside the house a kid ain't just gonna sit there to forget about it and he especially wont leave the house until his parents dealt with it.

That's another thing. Any father I know in life would just out of the front door and fight somebody standing in the driveway if he was being creepy and scaring his family.

Also, needs a better ending. More suspense and tension needed.

5/10 (this is not meant to be insulting but rather constructive)