Talk:If That Dress Could Talk/@comment-25768887-20141127013229

Kind of interesting story...could be improved. Some of it was just plain ridiculous ("a dress that could cure cancer", seriously? Surely you can think of something better than that. No offense but that and several lines around it had me rolling my eyes). Other parts were confusing.

"...and what will a wolf always do with an injured deer?" Did he plan to kill and eat her? Was he just acting nice so he could kill her later for avoiding his advances?

"Do you think this deterred our dashing heroine with the impressive stubble? Yes, it did."

Why did the woman have "impressive stubble"? That should have deterred him more than her running away. Why did you call her the heroine when she was far from it (unless you go by it just meaning she was the main female character, which I guess kind of works)? And why did it say it deterred him (or her, since it did say heroine) when he followed her right away? Maybe you meant hero...I sure hope so.

The ending didn't mix well with the rest, either. Perhaps if it ended when he heard the music or around there.

The goat head part kind of ruined the whole thing, too. I was finding the story interesting (ghost lady, accidental time traveler seeing someone who was murdered?) until that point. But I do get that you got that part from a legend.

The title "If That Dress Could Talk" seemed to be implying he was seeing something that had happened in the past, or seeing a ghost of a woman who had been murdered, you know, something similar to that. Not random goat headed lady. The conversation in the end makes no sense to me, either. Were they talking about seeing the lady in the red dress kill that guy? Were they somewhere else and just mentioned seeing her as she walked past?