Talk:Mr. Widemouth/@comment-25181615-20140715065605

Let me start by saying, maybe the best creepypasta I've read, Not scary, but entertaining. Good stuff.

However, problems are afoot in the first paragraphs. Your backstory is a bit willy-nilly.

"... my family was like a drop of water in a vast river, never remaining in one location for long."

"...  settled in Rhode Island when I was eight, and there we remained until I went to college."

"...  in the back yard of a house in North Carolina..."

"...  the apartment we rented in Pennsylvania..."

Loved it otherwised.