Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180827122922/@comment-33488654-20180827161022

RedNovaTyrant wrote: Steven&quot;SpringBubba&quot;Savoy wrote: Meh, this is an alright story.

One complaint tho, the girl being dead seems kinda forced and just used for the sake of shock value like in dating game. Kinda the point for this one. Since it's so short, just gotta rely on that shock factor. I also chose my words carefully as to not contradict the story - like how the date says "May I?" instead of "Could I hold her?", hiding her intentions. It's not for everyone though, I understand. No no, it is very well written. I do like it. My only complaint was the girl being dead tho. Y'know, it just kinda kinda comes outta nowhere and just feels kinda forced. It just kinda feels like it's sole purpose is shock factor.