Talk:The Sweeping/@comment-5854149-20140926032804

Pretty good. Some of the phrases you chose took me out of it ("fallout shelter on steroids"), the religious aspect was a bit heavy-handed, and the basis for it is fundamentally the same as a previous PotM ("The Disappearance of Ashley, Kansas", which I also found to be a bit creepier, honestly). Not too bad, though; it just didn't draw me in at all. 7.5/10