Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26502770-20150620165909/@comment-26475800-20150621041705

Okay, so there are many spelling errors, grammar errors, and the story seemed rushed. There are a lot of problems with this story, why, out of everyone in the world, would he choose his sister to be killed? Even if she did bully him most of his life, most people don't want to see their family members murdered. Secondly, you need to give much more back story and realize that a girl most likely wouldn't be fucking a priest in the ass, I think you got your people swapped with that line. This story is full of things like that. I don't know if the above comments are after the edit, if they are you need to reread this story, use word or a website that will check grammar and spelling. Read you story out loud and see what doesn't sound right, if it doesn't sound correct to you than it most likely isn't. Fix it up some more, and re-post it. keep on trying until you get it right.