Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26060404-20150131043216/@comment-5321651-20150131103139

To be honest, there's not much I like another this pasta. It's riddled with spelling mistakes and misplaced punctuation. There are a few grammar mistakes, but nothing major. The real reason I don't like it is because while some good pastas don't make sense logically, this just says "screw you" to the laws of physics. I'm not saying the zombie part is bad, I'm saying the fact that you are still clearly conscious yet you cannot move is not a good idea. It goes beyond not making logical sense. Although that's probably just because I hate zombie stories. The amount of people I know in real life and on the Internet that legitimately believe zombies do/can exist is just silly.

Also, I don't see why you made the font look like that. Maybe you wanted it to look like a journal entry, but that isn't what this pasta is. I interpreted it as a look into the protagonist's mind, because if he is eternally trapped and cannot do anything to move, he couldn't write a journal.

So, yeah. The plot makes no sense, there's lots of writing errors, and the font needs changing. I'm sorry for making such a negative review, but I just don't like this pasta. I'd say that if this was uploaded to the site as it is now, it would be deleted.