Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28298312-20160503154416/@comment-27905100-20160505202302

This was a decent pasta, with a great twist I didn't see coming, and I would complain about it being set in the zombie apocalypse, but that's integral to the story. There were a few grammatical errors and I'd suggest a read-through to see if there was any wording to change, and your story needs some more commas where natural pauses would be, but overall it's a decent story. I'd mainly focus on what ChristianWallis said, and I only said what he didn't cover that I thought I'd suggest, but good job on this. Good luck.