Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-1186783-20140817151538/@comment-24381191-20140817163222

First off, you keep using the wrong homophone, like you used 'here' instead of 'hear' and 'waste' instead of 'waist.' Other than that, you keep randomly capitalising the first letter of some words, like Holiday, Nights.

The story is actually not too bad, I didn't really get the math bit, but then again, it doesn't really have anything to do with the plot, and I DO suck at maths.

I also didn't get the cycle bit. But I am pretty stupid. Other than that good story, and it kept me interested. I knew that Peter had to be Peter Dawson. But good job.

PS: I like the second ending better, the one with the ticket. Much more sadistic.