Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26113663-20150131180627/@comment-25941663-20150131193121

I will post some more errors.

'the stronger' -> 'stronger' 'as time also continuously flows' delete this 'made the streets looked' -> 'made the streets look' 'why did it exploded' -> 'why did it explode'

There are many more grammatical errors in this. I think you improved it from last time, but this still needs a lot of editing. You certainly need to practise more on grammar and phrasing.

The story itself doesn't seem that bad, but I am afraid I couldn't make it to the end. I can't stress this enough, you need to improve your grammar. You are letting yourself down. You might have the greatest ideas in the world, but nobody will read your stories if they are riddle with so many errors.