Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4079896-20150116164130/@comment-25477067-20150116170152

English must not be your first language because you have managed to break more rules in one creepypasta than I have ever seen before. You character has no sort of brain if he continues to watch the tape after all the wierd things happen, The grammer is unspeakable, you break so many cliches that I drown in them, the formatting is ostly wall of text, and the ending is awful, unfinished and uses stilted, broken sentences to piece it together. If this story wasn't so long, I would think that this is a troll. I had to skip the entire tape description because it was so cliche and non-paragraphed. This would only get published on trollpasta.com at this point.