Talk:Why I Can't Have Friends/@comment-5733573-20180806053821

This story is really problematic. It's all buildup that goes absolutely nowhere. There's no climax to make reading it worthwhile. Second, the relationship between the narrator and the object of his obsession is really unhealthy making the rest of the story really hard to appreciate it in my opinion. Finally, it's riddled with grammar and sentence structure issues. There are so many it wouldn't be worth it for another user to go in and edit. For your next story, I strongly suggest posting it to the Writer's Workshop message board here on the wiki to get some good feedback for revising. This will help you create a story that's as good as it can possibly be before you post it on the wiki properly.