Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24248644-20170104155637/@comment-27012445-20170106035238

there are some very good things going on in this story. You have the foundation for a very good story and would highly recommend spending just a bit more time in developing that story (especially the paranormal activities encountered with the desk) Regardless, I commend you on a novel idea. There are some awkward sentences and blatant grammatical errors that are easily fixed but do take you out of the story. So even though you've put it on the WW, your job is not done. EDIT, EDIT EDIT. I continuously go back to my stories and still find something I missed. The occasional incorrect capitalization, wrong punctuation, or missing "s" is fine but if it affects the readability, that hurts your review and distracts from focusing on your story. Remember, you want to be the one who finds the mistakes...not your reader. We are here to review your content and not be a spellchecker or grammar police.

Now go and read my story and point out all of my mistakes so I don't have to do it. Im terrible at proof reading. LOL

But Seriously, good job my friend