Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33937557-20180603171940/@comment-35711173-20180605225017

Jdeschene, You are right that emotions must come before science. Here it isn't a matter of science. We have shown that the death is sufficiently plausible. The discussion of addiction can just be deleted. The kid died - which would be very mysterious and suspicious. The whole town would be in shock. Then to learn that it was murder by dope - horrible. There could even be some more buuld up to that. Lots of emotions there.

An idea ... kid is waiting to go swimming and a cop drives up to question him on what he knows, a slower reveal.