Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10319977-20141211171540/@comment-10319977-20141214043232

Thank you for your input Empy. I greatly appreciate it. I actually started separating the dialogue more as the story went on. I think paragraphs such as the one above are alright to use because I specified which character was speaking after each line, but I'll break it and some others like it up a bit more.

I'll change the word to piqued, and correct all the its once it's posted.

As far as uploading it now goes, it's incomplete. It's closer to being finished now though. It should only be 1-2 days of more work 'til I upload it.

I just hope if someone finds a few other spelling/grammatical errors while reading it after it's posted they fix them rather than opt to have it taken down.