Talk:Dear Diary/@comment-1790303-20140705165346

Now that was GOOD. When I hit that ending, I got crazy goosebumps. Most of the time, I worry about diary set stories because they can have very, VERY similar conclusions most of the time, maybe even all of them end the same. You have to take the idea of that diary story ending, and present it in a way that is different than the typical, a lot of emphasis on the protagonist's desires and wants, and honestly, you did that perfectly. After a while, the conflicting feelings and emotions got repetitive, and that's a trap you might want to avoid, because repitition is a double edged sword, and in this case, it hindered the piece more than helped it towards the end. Overall, 8/10, good for a really strong shorty.