Talk:A Figure in the Fog/@comment-25037895-20150417203739/@comment-25148755-20150417215257

Appreciate you going through. There are a couple corrections you made (mostly break up of paragraphs) that I'm probably going to go back and implement because I thought they worked. The main reason I undid your revision was because of the absolute hack job you did with my quotations. At some points you had rearranged dialogue so that incorrect characters were saying lines and had entire paragraphs of dialogue not contained in quotations. You absolutely butchered the multi-paragraph quotation rule (i.e. opening quotes at the beginning of each successive paragraph of dialogue from one character but only closing quotes after the last paragraph.) It was going to be harder to keep your revisions and fix all those errors than to simply undo it and go back for the flow corrections.

As far as the ellipses, we're both wrong. Apparently you need a space both before and after them, so I might go back and fix that. For goddam, it's an accepted, if technically incorrect, alternative slang spelling of goddamn or god damn.

Since you went to the trouble of reading, I actually wouldn't mind some thoughts on the story itself though if you have the time.