Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27123781-20151026212944/@comment-24101790-20151028052727

Actually it was deleted due to the issues Umbrello outlined above and a few others as well as the similarities to other stories like: Monsters on the Bed, Natalo's story which I can't remember the title of, The Thing Up There, and a few other Reddit stories.

That being said, you've resolved a lot of the issues and it's unfair to declare that even if a story shares a premise that it is unworkable. You put a lot of work into it and were probably not aware of the other premises when you wrote it. I'd say it's good to go.