Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25383866-20161021144248/@comment-25226524-20161021192702

Well I really don't have much bad to say other than I think the end might benefit from being carried out just a bit more, and I agree with Christian that I would prefer it didn't have the "Beth didn't forget about me" line. The conclusion just seemed a bit out of step with the pacing up to that point. A little more winding down before the reveal could bring a more complete feel. I really like it and found the narrator's voice to be particularly pleasant.