Talk:The Number of Darkness/@comment-26475800-20150726004914

First, I want to say sorry for taking so long to read this after I said I would. My son had gotten into a bag of flour and decided to make it snow inside.

This was a well written story and a good plot. I like the battle the protagonist has to go through, with his family, his personal battles, the Reverend, and the town. All were constructed well and flowed smoothly. The twist at the end was something that I didn't expect, I thought it would have been the Reverend. You are also good with your history and making the story feel like it was truly a journal from way back in the day.

The story was creepy for sure with a rather disturbing subject matter. There was more than on part, mostly because of the subject matter. The idea of demons taking over children is always great, and that you know the demons, as well as what sin they are connected to is good. You have done some research into this.

If I was going to say any negatives about this, which I didn't really catch many, it would be that at least once you used then as apposed to than. And, I don't know if it works this way for quotes from the bible, you didn't use a hyphen for twenty-five or any of the other quotes which are higher than the teens. Besides those two things there was nothing wrong with this story.

Over all it was a well written story and rather unsettling with the end and some of the other parts. You made the read feel authentic, which is hard to do. The history was spot on and your folklore was as well. Just for those reasons I would be happy. But that you had put such a good story with the setting you have surpassed exceptions.