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Galvanocide wrote: I would give him a goal and provide his insanity with a more deep-rooted cornerstone or foundation. His resolve on attaining his goal would be the prime thing to spawn his lunacy. The trauma he had undergone, of course, would contribute as well. Jeff's objective would be associated with the misfortunes had had endured. The tribulation would be more severe and tolling and so will the culprits. The culprits would be more sadistic and "creative" with their crimes. They would primarily find joy and amusement in Jeff's reactions; his screams, whimpers, pleading, etc...

After those adversities, Jeff would wonder and contemplate deep into the night what was so entertaining about his reactions. His contemplations would grow more and more pensive and frequent to the point of whiling away the entire day, weeks, even months, musing this. One day, this drove him to performing the exact same thing to other people. He wouldn't consider their age nor their sins and good deeds. Initially, he tortured and slaughtered his victims to figure what was so amusing about other people's afflictions, why the people tormented him like that. But, ultimately, he found his victims excruciated and desperate reactions pleasing and engaging-- fascinating even. The amount of victims will increase as his desire to kill intensifies. His family will serve as his second victim(s), as stated in the orginal story.

Onto his appearance. Instead of whiteness caused by bleach, his skin will become incredibly pale instead, due to years and years of anemia. His anemia would be never treated sufficiently, thereby making him pale to the extent of appearing white. He even grew paler when he was in prison and when he was engulfed in depression.

After bathing in fire(with the bleach excluded), he gained patches of pale, sinewy, leathery pink skin that harmonized uncannily with his burnt white skin. HIs lips would stay the same as well. However, since he likes his new obtained lips so much, he uses his victims' blood to augment to its brilliant vermillion hue. His eyelids would not be sliced off. Instead, he'll gain eerily dialated pupils due to the thrill of tormenting people and the strong scent of blood that frequently washes his nostrils. His paleness caused by anemia would be one factor that would induce the people who inflicted pain and torture upon him. His charred, black hair would be cause by his mere inclination. I mean, why not dye your hair jet-black? The fact that he sliced the nibs of his mouth will remain.

The kids who injured and set him ablaze would be adolescents instead. Perhaps, 16 or 18 year olds. They're secretly drug addicts and because so, Jeff would disclose this to their parents. However, before he could do so, they took action and made sure he would be traumatized enough to keep his mouth sealed.

In addition to his murder weapon, a knife, he would occassionally utilize ordinary, run-of-the-mill, everyday items such as pens, wires/cords, spoons, etc...

The rest would remain the same.

Man, that was a lot of alterations. Dude, that was awesome, and I thought my remake was good. Although his eyes not being burnt might not seem that cool and what about the black rings around his eyes. Anyways, if you want to read my pasta, here's the link:

http://spinpasta.wikia.com/wiki/Jeff_the_Killer's_True_Origins