Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24821182-20141102150249/@comment-24821182-20141102151817

The Koromo wrote: This would probably deleted for sexual content, given that Bitchcraft was recently deleted for the same reason.

Also, the story succeeded in doing nothing but making me sick. You know that isn't a good sign. There isn't anything scary about a seven year old being mutilated and dismembered, nor is there anything even remotely scary about her mother being murdered brutally or her husband being castrated or her newborn being killed - it's just sick. Not scary, not creepy, just disgusting. Also, there's absolutely no established reason for these people threatening this family with vile acts. And the final sentence don't cut it either; sorry.

My advice; scrap it, or rework it. You're a good writer who can do better than just shock value. Yeah, I guess it really just is gross and juvenile. I'll just let it die, then. Also, Bitchcraft was seriously removed? I guess that's why it didn't make PotM...

I'm going to write something better at some point, I just need to be in the right state of mind.

Thanks for your review, and sorry for the story being repulsive to you.