Talk:Bokor/@comment-35911608-20200221010329

Bokor - by Dgrady237 (#20, Judgment)

Wow. Hot damn that was good. I mean, it’s no surprise coming from your last few contest entries, but just… how is this possible? Your writing style is impeccable, the plot flow is fantastic and you kept me engaged through the story’s entirety. The premise in and of itself is exceptionally clever, and really REALLY hammers down the Upright-sided meanings of Judgment. At first I almost thought it really was the Day of Judgment mentioned in the Bible, but I suppose it is similar enough.

As for creepiness, most of the story freaked me out to some degree, whether it was describing Tomas being buried/unburied, the scenes of zombies rising up from the ground, or the horrid memories slowly being returned to him. I really enjoyed how you showed Tomas’ inability to precisely remember his sister’s name as he was carrying the other little girl. I like that the main character is the one delivering the judgment and not the one receiving it. I don’t really have any problems with this story whatsoever. I loved it to death.

Style - 5/5

Creepiness - 5/5

Enjoyment - 5/5

Use of Theme - 5/5

Grand Total: 20/20