Talk:Cave Children/@comment-24381191-20140703131451

This was pretty good. I thought the twist sucked, though. This had a few cliches, which were pulled off well, except for the woman sacrificing herself. It was stupid and cliched. You could have just left it at him not finding her or her being dead or groaning ' I was wrong' or something like that before she died.

I don't think that I've seen a pasta in this medium before, and if I have, it probably wasn't as well executed as this. So, for that 7/10