Talk:The Blue Scarlet Chess Set/@comment-25962917-20150111105749

First, I would like to say it was a good story, but I do have some suggestions.

It might be better if you were to somehow explain how does your protagonist know latin, and recognise the pieces to be replicas of Greek gods (I don't know if you know this, but the statues representing gods in Greek temples were believed to be "possesed" by the depicted god. Thought maybe you could find this useful for the plot).

Also, I think it would help if you would somehow corelate all the activities the protagonist used to do with his grandfather to the plot, and also explain why did he insist on his grandson getting the chess set, and did he or did he not know what was going on with it. And how did the protagonist know of the proper spiritual and physical way to dispose of it.

And, perhaps instead of going into detail, of how he took pictures of it, for example, but then not posting them for safety reasons, and not saying which one of the gods was in the picture that came out right, you could explain how everything looked, but provide another reason for not having proof of it?

To conclude, I'd give it a 7/10,  tho I da believe it could be a 10/10 if you were to make some slight changes.


 * Sorry for the long post and bad english (it's not my first language), I just liked the sotry and wanted to contribute :)