Talk:The Country Road/@comment-26100710-20160629074244

Well...This wasn't bad, but it wasn't that good either. You seem rushed the entire time, and it's pretty random and fast paced (too fast in my opinion). You need a few quotation marks, when he's sharing his thoughts with us. I didn't get any kind of feeling from this: Not fear, not dread, not anticipation, not a feeling of unease or nervousness. It was just kind of eh. You had a good concept, if you'd slow it down just a bit and add a little more, it would be a good story.