Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39344062-20190503130303/@comment-9041013-20190503233624

First and foremost your English needs a lot of work.

Second, this story follows a bunch of cliches; someone begins acting weird because reasons, the main character or narrator follows them around to find out something creepy going on, ooooh there's the monster killing everyone, miraculous hospitalization and trauma that nobody ever believes... That's not a good plot generally speaking.

So you've a lot of work to do here.

I wish you the best of luck.