Talk:What Have You Done, Martha?

The tragic turn is all right, but all the technical mistakes kind of hurt the impact of your story. At the very least, try to make sure the first sentence is free of errors. :\ I like how you leave the actual nature of Cally's illness to the imagination, without outright stating it. Read over this blog post and revise accordingly. Javer80 20:22, December 19, 2011 (UTC)