Talk:Reminder of Death/@comment-28938497-20150205223248

I think this is a very good pasta! I noticed a few grammar and tense issues, as well as "A remember that you must die". I'm tempted to take a point of for them.

I loved the characters, and the dynamic and reparte that they had, and the complexities of each. I will take another mark off, however, because you wrote the characters too well. By the end, I was kind of glad that Joel had poisoned Roger. I didn't feel as creeped out as I would have been if somebody died who didn't deserve it. As a short story, I'd definitely give this a 9/10, but as a creepypasta, a horror story, I'm afraid I'm going to have to give it an 8/10. Still, you're in the finals, so well done!