Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25150913-20140708185634/@comment-4832646-20140708202047

The main problems that got your story deleted were these: 1. It seems more like shock value, like you're trying to get the reader to say "That's fucked up" rather than trying to be unnerving. 2. It wasn't really realistic. It doesn't seem like something that could actually happen.

Let me explain: This girl is effectively living the life of a large number of other women - the whole high school sweetheart turned deadbeet scumbag thing. Not many of then just randomly go insane like this. The moment she did cut down on believability - she just went from depressed to mentally ill.

Also, the ending was rushed. You fell out of pace with it.

To me though, I'm seeing more a forced bondage session rather by a psycho woman rather than something that would realistically happen. Also, don't reupload deleted pages. Make a case on Deletion Appeal.