Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26462338-20150604061608/@comment-26464534-20150604150230

There are still a lot of things wrong in this post, grammar and spellingwise.

Also -while you put a lot of effort into describing things- many things that are pretty irrelevant are described or mentioned; for example the house or the whole party thing. The fact that the furniture was IKEA is pretty useless, too. Just because "Metal Bars" is the title it doesn't have to be capitalized bla bla bla..

All in all this story doesn't seem very scary, gory or otherwise qualified to be a creepypasta.

But good luck next time