Talk:Radio Music/@comment-26248899-20150509231535

Hi again, you asked that I suggest some edits, please find them below.

1. "(which he would play on his CD player almost all of the time)" Is this parenthetical necessary? Consider removing it.

2. How does he realize it is the same song but deeper and in reverse? Human ears can't pick up on that without sitting down and playing with records backwards. Maybe have him nervously hit some buttons on the radio which plays the song at regular speed forwards, and then he has his realization. Let me know if I'm wrong here, but you are implying that his dad is some kind of demon? If that is the reveal, it needs a stronger and more drawn out connection.

Other than that, this story is pretty good. Try goign through it again and making the sentences flow better. Good luck!