Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180623102805/@comment-26444017-20180628084100

Sorry for the belated response. Things have been busy.

I think the sex scene is probably out. I really don't know why I put it in there. I guess I thought it would work from the perspective of the characters, but in retrospect, I just don't think it has a place.

I will see about including more definitive personality elements to reinforce the narrator's issues. Mental health as a field is all over the place, and I figured that being obsessive to an extreme was a problem enough on its own. I'll see about correcting that fallacy.

I'll also try to make it more clear that the file marked with the monogram was intended to be a case file containing Julia's notes, and not as an indicator of her role as the other killer. If I can't make it work, I'll just remove it and eliminate the confusion.

And I'll be happy to look over your work, Spghetti. I can't guarantee the quality of my response, or how useful it will be for you, but there's no harm in reading it.