Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25825682-20150209205225/@comment-25477067-20150209213015

Much better than the last version. I love this version a lot better than the previous versions. That being said, There IS still the small grammatical error here and there. I would suggest running it through a few spell checking sites or possibly having a friend edit it. The caps is a big problem, as you will get called out for that. I suggest changing them to italicised lines, as that is the best way to separate them from the story in the way you want. The storyline is SO much clearer and I was actually interested in reading more. The therapy thing is a nice touch. I hope you comtinue editing and writing this story, because I can see almost nothing wrong with this version, aside from the aforementioned grammatical errors.