Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26044331-20150126020352/@comment-24101790-20150126022150

Additionally sentences need to be capitalized (as do names like Buzz and Woody.) A lot of typos: "confued", "mineing", "bissnus"

Grammatical issues: it's=it is, its=possession. Your=possession, you're=you are. Avoid starting sentences with conjunctions (and, but, because.)

Also you might want to take a look at the cliche compilation as your story used a number of them.

All in all, if you intend to take this to the Spinpasta wiki, I would strongly suggest sitting down and re-working it.