Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31498791-20181130120708/@comment-35711173-20181130174130

Thedarkflintstone,

May I make a suggestion or three:

First, read the first oh dozen chapters of "A Game of Thrones" by George R. R. Martin. Look at the structure of the chapters. The precise story content is irrelevant. See how they work back and forth from different points of view.

Second, break your story up into sections focused on these characters. We would have a segment on a Roman era teen-ager, then one on a middle aged shop owner in 20th century England, then a third. You probably would also want a short section from the "Controller" or "Librarian" or whatever you call it.

Third, when we are comfortable enough, have them cross. Perhaps the Roman goes into the tunnel, follows the Roomba and comes up in England. The girl meets him. Perhaps after several chapters, the Parrish Priest talks with the guy. (They both speak Latin, and the Priest knows enough classical Latin pronunciation to communicate.)

This is immediate and it has interest.