Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25024572-20161227203806/@comment-30996990-20170110021351

I typically hate Jeff the Killer stories because they tend to be nonsensical and bland. I was pleasantly surprised to find this was a very good story. Jeff has the potential to be a great character in the right hands, and you do a good job at repersenting him. I appreciate you saying that the original story is pretty dumb and giving Jeff a clean slate. I think this should be where Jeff starts. Not the original story. Your only real problem is adding in some words that aren't necessary. I'd just clean up some sentences and then you'd be good. In the long run this was very enjoyable.