Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27008899-20151105041421/@comment-27080023-20151109131126

Oh gosh, I hope I don't sound dumb here, it is a mental hospital right and he thinks it is a hotel because of his delusions?

I am no expert but I like how it is written and no grammar/punctuation errors stand out to me. Once I started reading I felt compelled to continue to find out what happened, which is good. I don't usually feel compelled to read stories written in this style but this time I did. So well done for that.

I just had a lot of questions about what was going on? It is just not clear enough to me wether it is indeed a mantal facility or a set up so he can be experimented on along with other subjects.

I don't know if it is just me, but I like a story ending to leave you wondering, did he go mad, was he already mad or was it foul play and he was set up to be sent there? Maybe I read it wrong (several times) but to me the last paragraph tells me definitively that he was crazy despite the weird/creepy tone of the rest of the story and it stops it being as creepy because I personally would like to be left wondering because that is what drives people crazy... to not know. I would possibly just mess around with it a little bit more if it were me. I like how he has the wrong number though.

You know like the film (not the book) of the shining. In the book it is most certainly supernatural, but that is ok because it is what the book is about, but the actual film leaves you wondering. Is he crazy or did an outside force/the hotel make him do it.

Sorry if I waffled. I liked the story, I would just be more creeped out if it were a little more vague :)