Talk:The Scientist

This is a decent story. It's one of the best pastas I've read on this wiki so far after joining today. The ending was too sudden and wasn't explained in enough detail, though. If you're going to take ten paragraphs to explain the scientist's life, you need to have at least half that many that explain his death. Letting the reader build a connection with the character, and then having the character die in 3-4 sentences near the end isn't a particularly good idea. I recommend lengthening the ending. Other than that, nice work.

The Bitter Cold (talk) 19:41, January 3, 2013 (UTC)The Bitter Cold