Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28346965-20160430202136

I can't figure out how to make it not so bad and was hoping someone can give me tips or help on it?

"I'll Never Go To Another Amusement Park"

I went to Disney World back in 2004 with my friends to get away and have fun on vacation, we had a great time that was until we got separated. I found myself stuck in this huge part of the park alone, i felt uneasy while walking to find them it seemed that everytime i would leave one place i would show up there seconds later and it didn't help with the mascots staring at me at every turn. Sure i know that's their job to stand and wave at family's but you'd think seeing someone alone they would come see if everything's alright but they just stood there staring at me with their cold, never blinking eyes and their wide plastic smiles I was afraid of them in general but lost with them being the only that could help made my blood turn to ice. I watched as the person slowly turned their head and followed my movement as I got closer to them, I stood in front of them and they spoke in the most ominous high pitched voice i ever heard it, said "Are you lost little boy~?" this made my heart stop. They didn't have any eye holes there was no way it could even know i was close to it or that i was lost unless I told him, then how did he know?, I decided that he probably deeled with people getting lost all the time so I decided to answer him I said "um...yeah, can you help me find my way back?" He said "Sure little boy, follow me~." That voice terrified me to my core but I had no choice but to follow him as he walked to a secret door which helps the other mascots to walk around the park, the dark hallway made him look even more ominous. I thought about leaving the door slammed in my face before I could even take one step out the door, as if he knew my plan he laughed at my failed attempt at running away I really had no choice at this point so deeper and deeper we went into the tunnels until we stopped in front of a huge metal door that read "LOST BOYS' all in caps and all in red I suspected it was supposed to be like Peter Pan's Lost Boys but it still didn't feel right in my gut. As we entered the room a strong mixture of Dusty and Metallic smell filled my nostrils that made me sick, the man flipped a switch and the dim lights turned on inside the room was old mascot suits of Mickey Mouse, Donald Duck, and others i could name there was also a desk covered in dust and a bunch of metal, foldable chairs, he walked in and took a seat in the chair I slowly stepped into the office like room and the door slowly closed behind me locking me in a room with a terrifying mascot I watched as he picked up a dusty phone and dialed some number while taking off his "head" it may have been the lighting but I could've sworn he had only a skull but I thought I was just being foolish. After the man was finished talking he put his "head" back on and turned to me he said "Don't worry little boy i have security coming to help you find your friends~." Okay this is when i fully panicked there was no way I told him I was looking for my friends how did he know? I watched him with wide eyes and recalled to the other mascots I saw as I got to the park and remembered they all looked like him, had he been following me and my friends the whole time we had been their? I wanted to run to the door and get out of their as fast as I could but I was scared stiff frozen to my chair and that is when I noticed the phone was unplugged he didn't call security he just wanted me alone, I was snapped out of my thoughts quickly when I saw he was right in front of me holding a mascot "head" in his hands almost as if he was trying to decide which one to choose he kept looking at the one in his hands to the ones on the wall behind finally he chose one. Without warning he forced the "head" onto me and then the rest of the costume, I tried to remove the "head" but it wouldn't budge all I could see was darkness and that was the last thing I remembered I woke up in the hospital and they said that I was found wandering in an abandoned park in an old mascot costume in a dazed state muttering "Are you lost little boy~?" in an ominous voice..... 