Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26364137-20150503164429/@comment-25037895-20150503170122

Here's my thoughts:


 * 1) Paragraph four is too lengthy.
 * 2) I unpurposely changed position |Unpurposely is not a word, even with a dash (un-purposely) it sounds clunky and awkward. A new word would be better.
 * 3) However, It did not look like | "It" should not be capitalized.

The story is great in my opinion.