Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25620544-20141123190439/@comment-24784485-20141125005418

This just isn't scary. The suspense is broken way too early. The creepy little kid gimmick is overused as it is. The grammar and punctuation is sloppy. 3/10.

this Could be improve with editing, but for a truly scary story you might want to come up with a more original concept.