Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25326117-20160701011727/@comment-27008899-20160705131240

I would agree with the others that it is interesting. I am all about the ending of a story. Imagine you are in the car with your parents and they tell you that you're going to Disney Land. But they end up taking you to Chuck-e-cheese i stead. Your story does have potential. I love new perspectives and often write about them in my own stories, but the ending feels unfinished. The set up was great! I had no idea where you were going, but when we got there it was Chuckee-e-cheese.

Now, you do not have to go straight horror on this. Macabre does not = good, contrary to popular belief. There are many ways you could take this. An interaction on the bus that leads to a meltdown causing a crash, a special and unwanted ability that come with autism that only manafests during a meltdown, or a meltdown that is so bad that your protag accidentaly injures another. Had any of those been in your story, your ending would have been perfect, minus the question. Kerp it up, I believe you are on the right track though.