Talk:Small Businesses/@comment-25052433-20140911084020

Well done. Very well done. Let's review.

What went right:

-This was a great story. Quick and twisted. You combined mystery and morbid practices into one awesome Creepypasta. Well done indeed.

-The plot was original and well delivered. Nothing more to really say about that.

-The ending was left a slow burn of disturbing delight. It was a satisfying end to a truly enjoyable read.

Overall, I can't think of anything that I would change with this one. The time and tempo were there. I really felt like the true terrifying facts of this place were developing for me at the same time as the character was learning what was really going on. Very well executed. Great pasta.