Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33683284-20171118021635/@comment-25458443-20171119011902

So I'm gonna dissect this first paragraph here.

"I don’t remember anything. [ <- should be its own sentence i think] I know how to drive, survive and I can’t seem how to forget how to smoke. [ <- also its own sentence] But the weird thing is, I know that I’ve forgot stuff. [this is weirdly phrased to me.] Faces, names and all the stuff that I know I should care about. There are, [ <- comma] however, three things I know for certain: [ <- semicolon, not a comma] foods scarce, people aren’t around, and there’s an ominous beacon of light that I want to be everywhere [maybe like "I wish was everywhere" not "I want to be everywhere?"] but [remove period] it’s like it shoots out from the earth’s crust and tries to break the sky with all the worlds’ apathy and hatred."

It really goes on like this the whole time. I think this might need to go draft by draft really, since this first version definitely wouldn't meet quality standards, I don't think.