Talk:Why I Became an Atheist/@comment-25941663-20160929184351

That was a great read. Perfect character writing, with great interactions. The whole piece felt real, mainly because of the characters. Phenomenal work there.

The death of the dog was kinda predictable, but it was executed masterfully so there's no problems there. That event, coupled with the way the father treated the son, made for a very emotional story that hit hard.

The only problem is that it's not creepy/scary. The tension is heightened in the scene of Bear's death, but apart from that there's nothing to terrify the reader. It's not all-important, but for a wiki dedicated to horror, this lacked.

I also liked the detail of the capitalization of god. It was capitalized while he was being indoctrinated, but when he broke free it lost the capitalization. Nice little touch, it's details like these that take stories to the next level.

Overall, everything was phenomenal. Great work, one of my favourites on the wiki.