Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5733573-20180731040414

Hi, all!

I've commented here a lot, but never actually used the forum. Now that I've got a story I'm not sure about, I figure what the hell? Here's a little thingy. Tell me what you think. Particularly:

- I think it needs to be scarier, so how would you do that?

- Title suggestions anyone?

Thanks!

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I love you. I'm so happy we're one now.

When I left my chamber, I knew it was you I'd find. I was forced out by something beyond my control, speeding through the universe with a purpose. You were that purpose. You still are.

The first time I touched you was incredible, a joining of heat and skin. We had no choice but to take it further. I remember how it felt when I entered you. Your body was soft and sweet. You made it easy for me in that magical, orgasmic moment. I wasn't inside for very long when I exploded, releasing myself into you, filling you up with myself and my love. Now we're linked forever. We are one, and we always will be.

They could have separated us, you know. They could have tried. But one look our bond was all it took, and they knew there was no coming between us. That's how amazing this love is. Everyone who's seen the way we are with each other just gets it. They know our story. They know we've both changed each other forever, helped each other fulfill our destinies. It's clear to them all that what we have is just here to stay.

I still can't believe it was me you chose. You could have made any choice. There's certainly nothing special that sets me apart from any of the others you could have gone with. But there I was, and there you were. You needed something, and I was in the right spot at the right time. Serendipity.

Before that, I would hear you cry, often at night. You thought no one loved you. You thought no one wanted you. I'd listen as you fought with so many men who would just come over and use you, if they ever showed up at all. And all the while, I was powerless. There was nothing that I could do to save you. I knew I had to wait. And that's what I did. I waited and hoped against hope for the day you would finally realize that none of these men were worth anything, that there was nothing they could offer such a sweet soul like you. At last, you learned the truth. The rest, as they say, is history.

And now, here we are. Today's the day, before God and everybody, that our union becomes unquestionably permanent. From this day forward, there will be no turning back for us, no leaving each other, whatever may come. Here you are, dressed in your best. The priest gives a beautiful speech as family members look on. This is shaping up to be a perfect day.

And now comes the part I've been waiting for, the moment that will seal us together forever. The man in black approaches and takes a good look at us. He sighs. I hear him mutter, "They should have gone with closed," and then he slowly lowers the lid, plunging us into darkness. From now on, this is all there will be. You: finally at peace and past your pain. Me: the bullet still lodged deep inside you. And the darkness: enveloping us forever.

I wouldn't have it any other way.  