Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24154693-20140415170255/@comment-24841494-20140417141640

Xxthegirlonfirexx wrote: GraydonL wrote: One thing I would do is split up the last paragraph. One where where she is hiding, then one where she gets possessed. Also, make it a little more clear that she is getting possessed, too. I want to leave it up to the reader's imagination. I think she was possessed the entire time, but you've obviously not read it that way. I think that when a reader can come to their own conclusion, it's creepier.

I agree, but right now it makes very little sense. Vaugeness is good, but not always.