Talk:Don't Wake Up/@comment-6702838-20131211173746

That was a fantastic story. This is as close to a 10/10 as I've seen on this site. The writing was great, of a professional caliber, and better than the average quality on this site by a factor of ten. The images and ideas of the story are, while not the most original or innovative, effectively communicated, and left me with a fairly vivid interpretation. The length was, whether by happenstance or meticulous editing, very fitting. It wasn't so long that I began to become bored, but it wasn't short enough to seem choppy or unfinished. It was just right, just enough words on the page to leave me satisfied but not overfed. The last interaction with the demon was, as everything else in the tale, well-written, and it was like a breath of relief from the oppressive atmosphere crafted by the story. And the very last part of the ending, thrown in quite casually, almost as an afterthought, brought me back from feeling relieved to feeling dread and surprise for the main character. The only reason why this does not make the cut for a 10/10 is because, while told very skillfully, the story itself was not particularly scary. I did share some of the main character's worries, but I don't think the petrified fear he was experiencing was transferred onto me. I struggle with that element in my writing as well, and it is a very difficult aspect of the craft. I believe that with a little more practice, the author would be able to produce a story fully deserving a score of 10/10.