Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160426151716/@comment-27838637-20160503233730

TheLocoTrain: Thanks very much for the critique. Hoever, all the spelling and grammar mistakes made in the first paragraph were intentional and used to display the skill (or lack thereof) of Michael's writing. The first paragraph itself is alluding to future events in the story, such as the hunting and the indescriptible monster.

MarioFan5050: I am glad you took the time to read and critique my story, and I am even happier you enjoyed it. I am glad the twists were effective as these were my main concern when writing. I can room for more description as you stated, and will certainly add some when I extend the hunting scene in my next major edit.

Dr. Frank N. Furter: Your in-depth critique is priceless to me and I will make the most of it. I have already fixed the said typos and grammatical mistakes, and will now work on extending the hunt by a few paragraphs so it doesn't feel as rushed. I could also agree with most of the comments you made and I have or am working towards correcting these mistakes. However, I did want to point out a few things just to clarify.

CAREFUL is written in capitals because he is referencing the poster in the classrrom, rather than the actual word careful. I am still unsure if this is correct or neccessary myself at the moment. Maybe you can clarify for me now that I have made sense of it?

Calibre/Caliber are both correct. I believe caliber is the correct way of spelling in the USA, whereas calibre is correct is Australia and Europe (similar to 'Mum' and 'Mom').

Parent-Teacher is capitalized as it is the name of an actual schedueled event made by the school. Not sure if this happens in the USA, but in Australia schools designate a day in which parents (and students if they wish to tag along) can get one-on-one feedback in regards to their progress in school.

In regards to the animalistic/bestial descriptions of Max, these are foreshadowing the 'truth' of what he really is.

I will work on extending the hunting scene for pacing reasons and to also clear up the uncertancies you had regarding Max's motives. However, it is supposed to be a little vague. Mr. Tyrell is able to speculate, but in the end these are not facts. It is largely up to the audience to decide why Max is doing what he is doing and etcetera (What is Max? Who is Max? Is Max Michaels father? What happenned to Michaels father?). I think leaving thses questions unanswered makes it more compelling and thought provoking than it would be if I answered all the reader's questions.

A_O.