Talk:Ronald McDonald House/@comment-25561434-20150319034034

Had a lot of potential, but felt rushed and fell flat. Like others have said it would have been nice if it wasn't just BAM SCARY CLOWNS WITH KNIVES DANGER, and if there was a little more buildup. What was the point of the newspaper? What's the point of the date? Does that date have any signifigance or is that when the story is taking place? And what's up with the ending? Clearly obvious Ronald was gonna be creepin'. Cliche "writing down my story". Overall 4/10.