Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31073921-20170201142604/@comment-31111342-20170201143245

Not bad, but a few things

1) this really isn't about the story itself, but you seem to keep pumping story after story out onto the Writer's Workshop instead of focusing on one and editing it to perfection. What about "My Brother"?

2) If the walls are all speakers, wouldn't the noise affect everyone, everytime someone makes a sound? If there's a reason why this doesn't happen, you should explain it a bit.

3) Did you mean to tense swap at the end?

4) So all the walls are speakers, but there's also a "pane" to see the guy next to the narrator?