Talk:Eloped/@comment-25042509-20150528182231

The build-up was excellent. I really started to like these characters and they played off each other very realistically. I think it started to fall apart around the mom with the hole in her chest. I don't understand the ending and I think this could've been a kick-ass story if you had kept the supernatural out of it. I hope you put your skills to good use and try again. I'll be sure to read it. 8/10