Talk:Hunting Ground/@comment-27007772-20150706084142

The use of Omegle is only slightly better than the usage of Cleverbot. The story writing was rather chaotic (not inherently a bad thing. Chaotic writing can be just as good as organized if done right), but the idea of a demon on omegle is odd to say the least.

"His flat had suffered a fire from an unknown source, the police were baffled. The body was never found, and I doubt it ever will be." In this case, it would open up for hostile or aggravated action, AKA a search party for the missing man, and/or attempts to piece together an action such as attempted murder. Flat tires also tend not to have their source found, as they can be loosing air for hours before a crash. Might have hit a nail on the road a few towns back. The police wouldn't be baffled at this, but instead more concerned with putting out an alert and search party.

The comments seem to be rather positive, but I will mark this for review just in case. It is always helpful to have an administrator view your story.