Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33488654-20190711004754/@comment-35711173-20190712051802

Bloody Spaghetti raised a number of very good questions. I'll give my additions and spin on a few points.

English: I cut out the sections in parentheses. Eighteen sentences composed of a total of 493 words remain. Six of the sentences are definitely run-ons. I spotted six spelling errors, one grammar, and one punctuation error. You also are very heavy on adverbs.

Any story with such a high rate of errors would be deleted from the main Wiki. That's an objective fact. You need to improve. People will tell you what the procedures to improve are, but they won't spend time correcting your story for you.

You need to draft a solid outline of your story. Come up with a specific point where one event causes the timeline to change. That "What If" point. Make the flow of events believable and logical. Research the events and technology in your story.

Here are some plot points to ponder for the next draft:

If a pilot is so severely sleep deprived that he is dreaming while microsleeping during his watch, he is not fit medically to fly an airplane. Sending him up would just be a waste of a good plane. Going unconscious for half a minute at 400 miles per hour during a battle doesn't end well.

A B-29 would be VERY stretched to carry any sort of respectable bomb and ammunition load for that distance. Of course, he could be flying from Gander, Newfoundland. That would only be 2,400 miles one way, which would give enough of a reserve to carry perhaps four tons of bombs. Still, two dozen planes times four tons of bombs isn't much of a load.

Look up the B-36. It was built for flying from Gander to Berlin and back. By 1949, it was in service. It carried several times the bomb load for that range. However, they were limited to about 40,000 feet and 300 mph cruising speed.

Four years after World War II was over, Nazi Germany's technology wouldn't have remained still. With access to Turkey's tungsten reserves and the entire Rolls Royce jet engine team as slave workers, they would have dramatically improved their engines. They would have produced the Focke-Wulf Ta 183, which would have had about the MiG 15's capabilities, including a 50,000 foot service ceiling. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Focke-Wulf_Ta_183 It would have eaten the B-36 for breakfast. The B-29 wouldn't have even had a chance.

Two dozen planes the size of a B-29 would definitely show on the Luftwaffe radar stations in Northern Ireland. The Elefant radar used towards the end of the war had about a 400 km range, or about an hour at B-29 cruising speed. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/German_Luftwaffe_and_Kriegsmarine_Radar_Equipment_of_World_War_II The Luftwaffe would have been in position and waiting for them.

As there is only one flight path, the Germans would have posted "Swedish" fishing trawlers along the way. Every time a squadron of heavy bombers flew over, somebody in Northern Ireland would get a radio message. Nailing the American carrier fleet would prevent further attacks. If the carrier sinks, all planes are lost and that ship won't be used to launch another attack. You can bet that every U boat available would be deployed and out hunting. Every naval radar would be hunting for them.

It's a very ride in a truck from Britain to Treblinka in Poland. It's also a very wet one, under the English channel. Why send a POW, a potential goldmine of information, to a death camp? Just follow standard World War II procedure. There were appropriate interrogation camps. The Germans were as good at interrogation as we were.