Talk:Bugs/@comment-28423057-20160627004656

Started off strong, but the last third was really confusing. I've read it a couple of times, and I honestly still don't understand what happened. I get that there were bodies, but whose? Who did he strangle to unconsciousness?

I'm a little grossed out, but mostly confused, and certainly not creeped out or scared. That's not a good thing to be at the end of a CPasta. 4/10; work on conveying information in a more coherent fashion. Leaving a little to the imagination is fine, but you need to give people something concrete to work with.

I see a lot of raw talent here though. Keep writing!