Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24937172-20141030145218/@comment-8674030-20141030191738

I like it. However, three major problems: First, backwards speaking. Terribly cliché. Try Latin instead? Second, I would assume that turning back causes death, or else people could just turn back instead of stopping, but you never say that. Third, there need to be more things that can cause you to die. Otherwise, it does not seem too hard to complete.