Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140902064431/@comment-25037895-20140902071834

[everything is so baron] -- Do you mean barren? As in, a barren wasteland. I suppose if that's what you meant, "baron" is a word also. It wouldn't really fit in the story, though.

[I wanted so badly to abide by what was right; I wanted so badly to imagine a life far from the pain and loneliness I felt consistently, but I couldn't.] -- This is a perfect example of how to use a semi-colon. Most other times, in the story, the semi-colons could be replaced with commas. Try to weed out the sentences where you don't need the semi-colon. Unless, you wanted it that way.

There's always an un-capitalized letter following the semi-colon.

Wow, that conclusion was excellent. Pretty flawless on the last paragraph.