Creepypasta Wiki talk:Deleted Page/Jeff the Killer/@comment-24503447-20140204035627

This is probably the worst piece of writing I have ever seen.. I'd be willing to bet the author was probably around 12 or 13? Grammar/syntax/wording sucks and the plot goes nowhere, showing little to no qualities of any sort of realism. Isn't the point of creepypasta that the story be at least moderately believable?

I know sponsored skaters that can't even make it over (what I'm assuming) is a 3 1/2-foot chain link fence, as is common in suburban neighborhoods. The amount of pushforce you'd need to exert to make that without a launch ramp would be completely inhuman.

Middle-schoolers would have a damn hard time finding, concealing, and even firing a gun of any kind (short of a .22 caliber, but anyone who knows anything about guns would agree that a projectile of that size isn't stopping ANYTHING). Let alone the fact that the kids probably wouldn't know how to properly load, rack, and prep a gun to fire. Incorrect load + jam + continued trigger pull = severe injury or death to whomever is handling the gun, not to mention shrapnel from the twisted and exploded metal flying at several hundred feet per second.

The bit about no one doing anything while this kid gets attacked and shot at? complete and total bullshit. Police would've been on the seen within minutes, violent kids tased and cuffed at the very least, and that would be all she wrote.

Anyone over the age of 15 should have taken at least an elementary chemistry course and know well enough that, while your standard bottle of vodka is distilled at around 80 proof (40% alcohol per volume ((which is the absolute MINIMUM concentration needed to ignite))), the alcohol itself doesn't burn; the fumes are what would catch fire. Even still, the alcohol would have evaporated enough and been diluted by the bleach to a point where ignition would be impossible by the time the lighter was even introduced into the equation.

I sincerely doubt that, even with Jeff's "bloodlust," there wouldn't be even an infinitesimally small fraction of enough adrenaline flowing through a 12 year old to stop another person's heart with a single punch. Your body runs on electrical impulses, not gears that you can simply knock out of place and jam.

Sincerely,

You Suck

P.S. Your writing is bad, and you should feel bad. 0.1/10