Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4849011-20160201003616/@comment-25226524-20160410022509

I'm not crazy about the introductory paragraph. It felt a little awkward and didn't give me much hope for the rest of the story. It just has a contrived feeling to it I guess. That being said, it certainly fooled me. This is a great example of how you can mix a commonplace thing or experience and throw in a little oddity with a lot of ambiguity and make a very unsettling visual. This actually creeped me out. The writing was very natural for the most part, and I love the way you close it out. This makes me think of The Smiling Man, which I think is one of the more unsettling stories on this site. Great work. I really enjoyed it.