Talk:Tonight/@comment-26242189-20170814051355

Rating: 5.9/10

The overall concept was great and gave me a bit of a shiver. However, there were quite a few grammar/capitalization mistakes. Another thing to note is the pace of the story was a bit unsatisfactory, specifically the lines "I explained how I had cut myself trying to shave. The next seven years were pretty normal." There should be a paragraph break there.

Also, why is the son in prison? There isn't any evidence he killed his father, in fact, it seems unlikely he would even be suspected. And even if he was, why wasn't he sent to juvenile prison, and why execution? Plenty of people are arrested for murder but aren't executed.

That's my two cents on it, at least. Take it as you will.