Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28655343-20160605031527/@comment-28360473-20160605114556

Whitix seems to have emphasized those points enough. Anyway, you seem to use a lot of ellipses in the story. Ellipses are typically used in writing and in informal writing for dramatic pauses as well as to indicate hesitation or a trailing off of a thought, and it's typically not good to overuse them.

Now is it just me, or does the title kind of sound like "karma"? You could actually go deeper and imply in a plot twist that the monster could simply be or maybe represent karma, and that the "victim" has done a lot of things of which he or she is guilty. Just a suggestion, though.