Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26027963-20150209004227/@comment-25226524-20150210013806

Well there isn't much I can say about this. It's incoherent. I think you need to do some more reading of well formed stories, perhaps from the Suggested Reading category on this site. I would also suggest reading the writing advice under the community tab at the top of the page. I think you need to have a better understanding of what a properly developed story looks like before you attempt your own. Read and practice. Good luck.