Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25597074-20151021034437/@comment-27008899-20151021163223

The build is always better in writing. Jump scares are hard to convey to readers. This is why many will use gore instead. To your other question about him triumphing, you could say "a sense of relief came over Billy as he set foot on the porch. Placing the cans to the side he yells into the darkness, "I'm not afraid of you!" As he turns he feel a sharp pain grasping his shoulder" or something similar. Feel free to use uncredited if you wish. Glad to help.