Talk:Dreams Apart/@comment-25383866-20141005164831

Some interesting ideas at play here. There were a lot of places where you had some great imagery, but there are a lot of things that stop me short as a reader. The way you write the dialogue for the maker and the dream figure keeps flip-flopping between having quotes, being in bold, and being in itallics. It makes it a bit of a chore to read. Keep polishing your style, you have promise.