User blog comment:Princess Callie/Why you shouldn't feel bad about criticism/@comment-25010954-20140811175834

I am new to this area of writing (generally just writing to amuse myself and/or a few friends with detailed deaths, love stories, erotic stories, or deadly erotic love stories). So having a large sum of people having access to my work makes me want to do it properly. I completely agree with criticism. I was wondering if anybody would like to give a me some pointers on my first pasta? I would love to hear what all I did wrong, horribly wrong, and what little I did right (I imagine not much is right seeing as it is my first and it would only be through an act of magic that it is in any good). http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/An_Anomalous_Child I apologize if this sounds like a cry of, "Look at me! Read my content!" I simply want to know what y'all think of it.