Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-38942144-20190625110914/@comment-9041013-20190625234737

So, it's like Batman's story? Just with some cultists that try to control the kid... ugh... League of Assassins gone wonky?

I don't see much scare here, because I don't know enough; they come to a town, town is controlled by some cult, cultists kill a bunch of people and leave a mark on the guy. He doesn't remember anything because of the drugs the cultists keep giving him and suddenly he knows everything and was just acting as if he doesn't.

Why all of this even happens? what's the point? Why him? How did he figure everything out? Does he have a chance at surviving? Doesn't seem like it considering the amnestic drugs... which... well... border the sci-fi.

It just has too many holes as it is to work right now.

Come up with something that'll make us care, explain the things and the events that transpire. Connect the dots, or create a way for me, the reader to do so myself... you don't have nearly enough here.