Talk:Horror Punk/@comment-26298997-20180228221637

Some of the wording is a bit redundant. If you say someone disembowled the victim you don't then need to say they removed the guts. The part about biting the corpse and taking a lock of hair would have been more effective had it been mentioned earlier so that the read could put two and two together on their own. I always start with criticism so don't take it too hard. Johnny sounds cool as fuck and I'd love to hear some of his music. Some of this put me in mind of Too Much Blood by the Stones. This was definitely a fun read. 7.5/10