Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25021361-20140604044739/@comment-25021361-20140604054851

That's exactly the help I needed. I often have trouble i guess 'focusing thoughts and putting them into words' i think that's what i meant to say. The idea is supposed to be like he is struggling on the inside with these beings and  he is envisioning this as though it were actually happening, to him it is reality. I want that to stay moderately hidden, these demons are actually his own thoughts and emotions conflicting and spiraling out of control. The first being his confidence, the second being his calm state, and the third being his most vulnerable and fragile frame of mind. I know he really does seem like a hollywood piece, I was hoping to show the impact these things were having on him and how unstable he was becoming. But that being said, I appreciate everything you said and will modify this to better the story. :)