Talk:The Night the Creature Responded

Diction
I don't have much of an opinion about the story because, frankly, I don't know what it was about. The idea of the creature, what is said to it, and why, is left unexplained. If you ask me, this doesn't make it "mysterious," it just leaves the reader confused. But I noticed that a lack of paragraphs and usage of incorrect or misspelled verbs were pervasive problems in the story. I know it's not a very large story, but paragraphs aren't just about length, they're also about clearly separating the major events for the reader.Neo Bahamut 20:32, May 21, 2012 (UTC)