Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24714617-20150521212703/@comment-24714617-20150522202531

Thanks for the feedback bro. The guy kind of gets sucked into another dimension, but mostly, he's started to see all the dimensions around him at once, and the people who experimented with that in another worlds too, which includes their alien selves. I was feeling really burned out the day I wrote this, and thought I'd seize the opportunity to see if I could write more like a madman like that. I agree it's a bit too verbose/formal and rough around the edges though so this experiment in writing has failed, it seems.

I think I can expand it by adding the "hey, I'm investigator X and I've just found this", although I think it can really kill the mood unless I make the story more modern. The introduction was meant to hint at it being a police report.