Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26908800-20150820093716

Hello, new contributor here. A little unsure of the site mechanics. Like the posting protocol and categorization of a story. A little sleep deprived too.

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/A_Ride_with_the_Evening_Star?venotify=created

But I had a piece I wrote tonight that I wanted to share.

Let me know what you think.

Is the begining too slow?

Is their enough tension to draw along through the piece?

Are the horror elements satisfying?

Is the dialogue believable? Hackneyed?

Do you care about the main character? 