Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25743804-20141122100537/@comment-25428589-20141203065724

I think that this pasta is extremely original and a great twist on the apocalypse genre, however I don't find it that scary. It's very well written, but it's just not something that unsettles me. With regards to the ending, I believe I understood it - the messages and webpages came from the future and accidentally told the people in the present when the world would end. But surely that's a good thing for the people in the present - since they know exactly when & how the world will end, they can prepare for it.

Grammar, punctuation and spelling are all fine for most of the pasta. There are a couple of occasions where you've missed out commas before subordinate clauses or dialogue, but nothing that overly detracts from the story as a whole.

Maybe it's just me that doesn't find it scary, I know that the end of the world is a fascinating and terrifying concept for many people, but it's never worried me for some reason. All in all, you have an original, innovative premise wrapped up in a well written pasta, but fall just slightly short on the scare factor. 73/100.