Talk:The Sounding of the Fifth Trumpet/@comment-10789912-20151127051331

Definitely a good piece. The writing style ("Instruction" style) is usually something that does not do well, but this story captured my interest until I reached the end.

The nods to everything from the Ouroboros, to the Nephilim and the four kings, and eventually the Garden of Eden were a nice touch. The usage of Abaddon, the one neither angel nor demon, whom brings about the apocalypse was a nice touch, and captured the feeling of the apocalypse.

The writing style was rather chaotic in some places, but this is a benefit to the story. It fed panic when it was needed, and paced it well. The flow of the story was great, and the emotion it was trying to give, in my eyes, was given in full.

The end was the best part, with the Garden of Eden's fruit being the end. Reading this, my mind clicked to Revelations, as I suppose you meant to do. I expected this apocalypse to be the end of the Bible, but was shocked when I found out it was actually the start of Genesis.

I dislike ritual pastas in 99.9% of cases. I appreciated the worth this story has to give. To me, this is what a ritual pasta should be, rather than the "get da pece of paper and rit the 666! U will becum devil!" bullshit that gets added to this wiki daily.

Good pacing, great usage of the Bible's lore and characters, a well-constructed story, and a fantastic twist. One of the best, if not the best, Ritual Pastas I've read in years of reading, even predating this account by a years.