Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-23872426-20150101012034/@comment-25959111-20150102234554

A few errors i'll point out- "Gaze his head back" Would make more sense if you just said that he gazed his head back.

"One of the put their baton away"

When linda is beaten "Eyes slammed wide open" slammed feels wrong

Disregarding these errors, I really enjoyed this one. The pacing was nice, nothing too over the top. I think (personally) that it would be better if you didn't outright state that he was in the holocaust hell, it makes it more interesting when the reader realizes this for themselves. Anyways, keep up the good work! Good luck with writing!

