Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180821164405/@comment-9041013-20180821235009

RedNovaTyrant wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: That's how Paranoid Schizophrenia actually looks like, delusion-wise at least. A very common delusion is being a target with common hellucinations being "they put something in/on me to spy on me". Turn the "tabs" into a kind of subconscious voice and it'll be smoother. Also, if we're going the path of PS throw in a line about how someone thinks his speech is jambled and him being unable to maintain a straight train of thought at least once.

Also, contrary to what Bob said, people who suffer from any kind of a paranoid delusion or something similar would have hard time seeking help, as they think their symptoms are part of the "enemy" that "haunts" them.

My mom works with a person who most likely has PS and this person is 100% sure they're fine inspite of detailing being "raped by an invisible man" once.

Also, kill the caps... instead, using an italic font to display Wallace's words.

On top of that, the brain can't hurt, so fix that part to "a pain in my skull" rather than in the brain.

There are some things to be smoothed out but otherwise, pretty awesome. I was debating between caps or italics, but decided on caps cuz it's almost like Wallace is screaming, making him seem bigger and such. Then I can save italics exclusively for the narrator's thoughts.

Ah, alright, I'll fix that about the skull. And I know just where to put that line you mentioned. you can emphasize screaming by punctuation; exclamation marks, full stops in what would be a middle of a regular sentence, etc.

Caps just seems silly to me because of the excessive use of it in bad stories.