Talk:For, Sandra/@comment-5946174-20131208185339

The diction and imagery are the greatest elements of the story. Your choice of words and descriptions built from them clearly illustrate the protagonist's misery and feelings of hopelessness after separation from this "Sandra." However, more could have been said about this mysterious woman; while it is good to leave certain things unknown, not enough information was given. Another thing that brought your story down was the syntax. Several sentences are poorly constructed, and you have a bad habit of using ellipses for effect. 6.4/10