Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25458443-20161215092959/@comment-25052433-20161223174551

Much like the first draft, I think this is a very original and cool idea. The character's constant state of confussion and the story only feeding bits of surreal clues here and there really do help carry the sense of strange dislocation. So, for plot, I love it and think it has a great place here on this site.

The grammar still needs work. You have a lot of words that are in upper-case that don't need to be. A good run through MS Word should solve a lot of that. This is still an excellent short pasta. Great work!