Talk:The Pill/@comment-44350353-20191107204449

This is woefully pretentious, but worse is the authors horrendous misunderstanding of semicolons in punctuation. It was incredibly dull in terms of compelling the reader as it meanders from a harrowing warning, to the origin of this star fish parasite. The inconsistent tone makes it feel like your reading a stream of consciousness rather then an actual story/warning. I don't see why you wouldn't tell the story from the POV of say a marine biologist that's discovered something strange and dangerous. This would at least remove the ultimate issue at the end where the author clearly loses interest in the story by neglecting to explain how or why he knows anything about this "pill". 2/10 The two points are for an actually decent idea that was unfortunately completely shafted by a clearly rushed writing process.