Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44987001-20200205002909/@comment-36627132-20200205005727

Carzyshark28 wrote: So how can I make it better Honestly, it is pretty much doomed from the start by being a blacklisted subject. We're at a point where anymore video game pastas aren't scary at all. Of course horror is subjective,

On top of that, this is riddled with cliches which have been outright banned (hyper realism, for example).

I suggest you take more time on your stories. This one lacks proper capitalization (i.e. "x box", "fortnite"), punctuation, and quotation marks.

Take more time on your stories. You can't just zoom through writing one and expect everything to turn out perfectly.