Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26966435-20150907155228/@comment-26475253-20150907205944

I agree that this could be a pretty decent pasta, it needs the capitalizations fixed, wording errors edited, etc. I also think a bit more descriptions might not be unwanted here, as alot of the sentences are just short and simple.

"It was the little girl"

"Now i wish i didn't"

etc.

Still, good luck on this.