Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35447404-20180506194632/@comment-35447404-20180506200034

Feedback welcome from anyone that gives it a read or a glance. If you gave up halfway through reading, please, tell me why (unless it's TLDR, then keep it to yourself, you lazy person). Thanks in advance.As a small changelog: I did away with most acronyms, changed some sentences to make things flow better, removed the direct reference to nationalites of crewmembers, leaving them implied by their names. Changed the standard of size and mass from Ceres to Eris (a bit more hefty) and changed most references from exoplanet to asteroid. Said Perplexity not only was renamed but was re-classed as an anti-planet and refered to 1 Loki as that from then on. It's still a bit heavy on hard Science and would like some sugestions as to how I could cut some of these references from the text w/o hurting the whole pesky "making sense" bit...