Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5614678-20190722213537/@comment-35711173-20190724184853

Doctor Bleed,

One medical man must help another. Of course, I will beta read it for you and review.

I use a lot of online tools to do the first pass of proofreading. They don't get all my errors, but they get most.

Bloody Spaghetti is right. This isn't horror. I've had that problem myself. Sometimes, my characters live reasonably happy ever after. People get bored by that. I've wondered if there isn't a level of horror that a real-world superhero would face. When two disasters happen at once, how do you choose? What do you do when things go wrong? Maybe you save thousands of people by tossing the bomb that's about to go off out of the crowded city auditorium, but it lands in a little church 10 miles out of town and blows up the choir of ten little girls practicing for a Christmas number. How about seeing the burn victims, people pleading for help, people asking for your help with everything. You're Uberman/Captain Astonishing. You can do anything - save my child from dying of cancer. You can do it. How about when you get exposed to the really sick side of humanity, abused children, dead children, homicidal maniacs, etc.

Lots of cops snap from this, and there's no psychological counseling department for superheroes. There also wouldn't be days off. If there's a disaster on Sunday at 3:00 AM, you can bet the Batphone or equivalent will ring and you will be expected to fly out and do it.

So, how would he keep his identity secured from neighbors? Somebody is going to notice the guy flying in and out of a certain apartment building?

How does our superhero get paid? Sure, he gets something from his day job, if he can get time to work it and if he isn't so exhausted that he falls asleep over his work?

How many calories do you think this guy would consume a day when stopping speeding locomotives and leaping over tall buildings for a living? What would his food bill be? How could they hide something like that?

Hopefully, this gives you something to think about.

Dr. Bob