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Contest
Hey vroomie, felt like ages since... anything happened! How are you? Hope all is well, good friend. Just a heads up, Koromo has a new contest and I'd love to see you enter if you have time. No cash prizes but just a bit of fun friendly competition. Kapice??

New year's hugs from yo best cat XD Rinskuro13 (talk) 19:24, January 3, 2016 (UTC)

New new year's post
You missed a day? ~screams while clutching and shaking head~ Oh, I feel you! When it happened to me it was disappointing, but also a bit of a relief. It was impressive that I had gotten as far as I did. If you try for it again, then best of luck! :-D

I'm a teetotaler myself, so I always have some kind of soda, like IBC root beer, Sprite, Dr. Pepper, Mr. Pibb/Pibb Xtra, etc. to ring in the new year. It's the attitude that's important. I did the sparkling grape juice one year (I was maybe twelve or thirteen) and I got a splitting headache! I thought, "I'd hate to think about what a real hangover would feel like!" A friend of mine, who knows about such things, offered that the juice was much too carbonated. In any case, on New Year's Day this year I had a headache because I had spent way too much time looking at a humor website on the iPad the day before. I don't like taking medicine, but I took an Aleve and thankfully I felt better. My mom, my aunt, and I went to a couple places (They shopped while I read and drew) and had supper at a Steak 'n' Shake. It was simple, but we had fun. Raidra (talk) 22:52, January 3, 2016 (UTC)
 * I'm sorry to hear about your headaches. I hope things improve.  My mother and my late father both admitted to having a history of headaches, so I thought, "I never had a chance, did I?"  Interestingly enough, what they had sounds like migraine headaches and I think mine are sinus.  Luckily I've found some things that will help.  Catching some sleep, sniffing tea tree oil, eating spicy food, and drinking caffeinated soda (I don't drink coffee or tea either) help sometimes, so unless it's really intense I try those things before taking an Aleve.  It's a shame when the medicine has side-effects as bad as, or worse than, the condition.  I could do a monologue about medication side-effects.  I'm allergic to mosquito bites, and possible side-effects for my bite cream include redness, swelling, and itching.  I thought, "How do you know that's a side-effect? Maybe it's just not working."  I'm glad you can drink the sparkling juice.  When you find a soft drink you love, it's a beautiful thing.
 * Here are a couple websites. http://www.steaknshake.com/, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Steak_'n_Shake. There was a rumor started about them some time ago, but it's not true.  It's sad that some people feel the need to start and spread rumors.  In any case, I think they must be pretty common in Ohio because while there isn't one in my hometown (Trotwood), at least three nearby communities have them (Miamisburg, Englewood, and Huber Heights).  A lot of places have closed in Trotwood, so we have to go out of town to get some things.  Thankfully there are still some good places to eat, but it's a shame that you have to go the next town over if you want something that you used to get all the time (such as Arby's chicken fingers or a Wendy's Frosty). ~crosses arms and pouts~ Raidra (talk) 20:30, January 4, 2016 (UTC)

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Well I also got the Xbox One edition of Minecraft and it's so relaxing to me. Though that can apply to all versions of Minecraft. I heard that Minecraft can't be made into a good scary story. Is that true or is there hidden potential?

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   16:08, January 4, 2016 (UTC)

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Something strange happened when I first played the Xbox one version. I was going down into an underground tunnel I made and I heard a loud violin play for a couple of seconds,then it stopped and everything went quiet for awhile. The weird part was that there weren't any dangers around me that would've triggered that music.

I've also been working on a Pokemon fanfic that is catered towards an older audience. I've been working on character sheets for the main protagonist and her family. I can show them to you if you want.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   21:59, January 5, 2016 (UTC)

Drug Commercials monologue
I don't know if this is any good, but years ago I wrote some routines, and here's the one about drug commercials/side-effects.

''There was this drug commercial one time I thought demeaned people with post-traumatic stress disorder. There was this big ball which supposedly had the illness, and they had it gasping and looking around like it’s just finished a two-day binge of crack, weed, and crystal meth. (imitates ball) What is that!? I’ve never done that! Someone misdiagnosed that ball! It doesn’t have post-traumatic stress disorder! It needs to have its pipe taken away!''

''I don’t like drug commercials because most of them are stupid. There was this one for an adult ADD medication in which they had different pictures flashing up every ½ second, then claimed that’s what the mind of someone with adult ADD is like. If their attention span is ½ second, how can they pay attention long enough to order the medicine? It’ll be like – (looks around room).''

''There was another commercial for asthma medication which had people playing outside because they don’t have to worry about asthma. That’s not the stupid part. That part’s perfectly understandable. The stupid part was the winter scene. This guy and this girl were having a snowball fight, and this poor guy seemingly took a snowball to the crotch! I’m watching this thinking, “I don’t know, I think asthma might be preferable to that!” I mean, sometimes you can at least tell when an asthma attack is coming. You can’t tell when someone’s going to heave a snowball at your crotch unless they’re known for doing that. “Hey, let’s have a snowball fight!” “No way, man! You threw a snowball at my crotch the last sixteen times we had a snowball fight!”''

''Also, it’s interesting that the side-effects of the drugs are the exact same things the drugs are supposed to cure. I saw a drug commercial saying people with depression should take this drug because otherwise they won’t be able to sleep and would feel miserable and alone. They then added that side-effects include insomnia, diarrhea, vomiting, and sexual side-effects. In other words, if you take this medicine you still won’t be able to sleep, you’ll still feel miserable, and, depending on what kind of shallow jerk your significant other is, you might be alone. Whenever I get bitten by mosquitoes, I get these red, itchy bumps, so I have an ointment to help my allergy. Side-effects for that include redness, swelling, and itching. Side-effects for other allergy medications may include breathing problems and watery eyes. How do they know that these are side-effects? Maybe it’s just not working!''

So, that's the monologue. I have to admit Jeff Foxworthy did it better. He did a routine about drug side-effects, including a weight loss drug which had "anal seepage" as a possible side-effect. He noted, "I don't care how much weight you lose. If that side-effect kicks in, you're not going to be looking hot!" He then imitated a guy starting to tell his friends to check out a girl before gagging in disgust.

Talking about our hometowns going downhill reminds me of a comic strip I read in which two characters were comparing their upbringings. "The roof always leaked on us." "You had a roof? We thought roofs wuz for rich folks!  We always had to huddle under a blanket." "You had a blanket? Gosh, you wuz lucky!  We had to huddle under a napkin." "You had a napkin?" I'll have to find that and post it. In the meanwhile, here's another routine I wrote about an unusual contest in Japan (though I've found out that's not the only place where this kind of event happens). This is something that is probably not on the list of tourist attractions...

Breaking Wind Contest

''I like to read a lot. I have some very interesting books. For instance, I have this book called 2201 Fascinating Facts. It has funny facts, it has horrible facts, it has bizarre facts, and most of them are indeed fascinating. It’s also interesting that they have two thousand two hundred and one facts. The story is that they had two books of facts, and when they combined them into one, they just happened to have that many facts. If I didn’t know that, I would’ve wondered how they decided on that number. I could just imagine someone rushing into the office and exclaiming, “I found another fact!” “Well, we already have 2200 facts.” “I know, but you have to look at this!”  “Oh, my gosh! This is the most fascinating fact I’ve ever read in my whole life! We’ll have to change the name of the book so we can include this!”''

''One of the facts said that in ancient Japan, they used to hold annual contests to see who in town could break wind loudest and longest. Winners were awarded prizes and acclaim. I know some of you are thinking, “Boy, they did weird things way back in the day.” Well, guess what. I was flipping through the channels one day – I like flipping through the channels because you come across some interesting stuff that way – and they had a segment on this show called Sushi, which shows clips from Japanese television. It turns out that in some town in Japan, they still have an annual breaking wind contest! I couldn’t help wondering about some things. For example, do people ever try to cheat by putting Gas-X or something like that in the other contestants’ food? I can just imagine the evening news. “Scandal rocked the breaking wind contest today when it was discovered that the winner had an associate slip Beano into the food of the other contestants.” Another thing, you know how sometimes people have friends that try to get them to do things they have no desire to do? Around the time of the contest, I bet some people say to their friends, “Hey, you and me should enter!” Some of those people probably wind up losing some of their teeth. Also, how much performance anxiety do the contestants suffer? “Tenchi! I thought you were at the big breaking wind contest!” “I was, man! I’m out already! I blew it big time!” “What happened?”  “I was so nervous I couldn’t even think! Then I burped in front of everybody! I’m so embarrassed!”'' Raidra (talk) 23:13, January 5, 2016 (UTC)


 * "They aren't allowed to have different chemicals in their drugs, if they did then the FDA would err... anal seepage." ~laughs~ Well, it looks like I'm not the only comedian!
 * Just so you know, that's not the sort of contest I'm into or anything. Now that that's settled, it's good to learn the language and customs before moving to a place.  You don't want to be one of those jerks who's always offending everybody out of ignorance, and then acting like the locals are the problem.  Hopefully you'll end up in a nice little town and not one of those crowded cities where the subways have helpers to shove people into the cars.  We need to have more trains in America.  I've never ridden a train, but I have ridden a Duck.  Before you question my sanity, here's what I'm referring to. http://newport.ridetheducks.com/  They used to have Duck rides in Dayton (Ohio) years ago.  My family rode on it twice and it was a cool experience both times.  Maybe they have these in Japan too. Raidra (talk) 01:26, January 7, 2016 (UTC)

Land of the rising sun and efficient trains
Expect a lot of items with unusual English. I read recently that a lot of Japanese companies use English phrases simply as decoration (like how in America some companies use Chinese, Japanese, and Korean characters as decoration to make an item seem more exotic). You may know about this site already, but http://www.engrish.com/ pokes some lighthearted fun with this (They explain in the FAQ section that no offense is intended). One note- this is the actual site that gave me the headache recently. I just found it so interesting (and sometimes hilarious) that I couldn't stop looking at it. If you find you enjoy it then you might want to have a timer handy to avoid overexposure.

It's interesting that we've been talking about Japan because I've been doing a lot of reading on the samurai lately. Something got me started thinking about them, so I checked out a lot of samurai-related books from the library. After reading a few books I also had the good fortune to find my book of folktales about Ooka the Wise (a legendary judge said to live during the feudal era). I love this book, and my new knowledge of the period gives me understanding which enhances my enjoyment of reading the stories. For instance, merchants are the villains of a number of the stories. That's because in that period merchants were one the lowest of castes, second only to the dregs of society. Since they made money without making anything (unlike farmers, who grew rice and other crops, and artisans, who made swords and other goods), they were considered to be base and greedy. However, other stories have Ooka helping honest merchants who had been robbed or otherwise wronged, showing his willingness to punish wickedness and reward virtue regardless of caste. Raidra (talk) 23:51, January 7, 2016 (UTC)


 * No, you're thinking of the right group. Those restaurants sound neat.  In the U.S. there used to be restaurants called automats (Either they're all gone or there's just one left).  They sometimes appear in old books and cartoons, or in stories set decades ago.  According to the Wikipedia article there are still some in Japan and other countries.  https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Automat  You know how in a lot of superhero cartoons the headquarters have a variety of big computers?  Well, something I'd love to see (and maybe I'll do it in my own comics someday) is for one of the heroes to open up one of the "computers" to reveal a compartment with sandwiches and cold drinks, like, "I knew it!  It's an automat!"


 * Hey, if you plan to travel to Japan, you'll need some way to save your money. I found this last night, and it's my new favorite video.  http://brog.engrish.com/2014/11/12/japanese-piggy-bank/  I found out it's called a Facebank, and if you Google "Face bank" you'll find lots of articles and pictures.  I still have an old wind-up coin bank which has a ghoulish hand coming out of a box and pulling the coin inside. Raidra (talk) 19:12, January 8, 2016 (UTC)

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Hey vroom,

I'm fine thanks, just very busy. And how's this for irony: I pulled out of the contest. I just have wayyyy too much going on and I'm pretty stressed out by exams, but I guess so is everyone I know. I just don't have the time or energy needed to create a good story... so yeah. Good luck to you, hope to see something new and looking forward to reading everyone's stories!

Rinskuro13 (talk) 17:33, January 9, 2016 (UTC)

RE:Word Count
Yep that's fine, it might take me a bit longer reviewing it than the other entries though. --Jojo risin&#39; (talk) 03:18, January 10, 2016 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay!
I didn't see your message yesterday. Sure, I'll have a look.

Ah, for a computer that dispenses foodstuffs! The desire of superheroes and mere mortals alike! I'm definitely going to have to have at least one in my comics. There was an episode of The Adventures of Pete & Pete which had a variety of vending machines (or maybe it was one very well-stocked machine) selling everything from underwear to airplane tickets. I wonder if it were inspired by the ones in Japan.

That Darth Vader bank sounds cool. There may be a bank for the new guy because they've made a bunch of other merchandise for the new movie. Comedic talk show hosts have been talking about the odd products, such as Star Wars makeup and Star Wars apples and oranges (The bag of oranges showed had BB-8, or whatever the new robot is named, displayed on the front. I thought that was pretty funny). I've been thinking about making a blog about the Facebank because some people find it creepy, some find it awesome, and some find it creepy and awesome. I'll let you know when it's posted. Raidra (talk) 20:48, January 10, 2016 (UTC)

You're welcome!
I think I'd like to see the finished draft. I think every country has both unfortunate stereotypes and cool things (natural and man-made) worth discovering. Those lotteries sound neat. They certainly sound better than those skill cranes (or claw machines, as I like to call them). I've read about these fancy toilets they have over in Japan. They say the reason we don't have hi-tech toilets like that over here is the threat of lawsuits. ~sighs~ That's why we can't have anything nice!

I saw two of the original movies (The Empire Strikes Back and Return of the Jedi) when I was little. I cared less about the story and more abut the cool-looking alien creatures (like the Tun-tun). It's fascinating how you can become emotionally invested in a character. One time I saw a music video (I think it was called either "Strange Flesh" or "Strange Blood") with a young woman and some kind of ugly lump (It looked like some kind of alien head). The young woman left it with a caretaker while she went to what I think was an audition. The ugly lump of flesh became very sick, and the woman immediately left the audition to go to the hospital. Sadly, the lump of flesh died. At the end the young woman and the caretaker looked into the sky and there was the ugly lump looking down on them. I was moved and I wondered, "How did they make me care so much about such an ugly lump of flesh in such a short time?"

Here's that blog- http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Raidra/Awesome_and/or_Creepy_Coin_Bank Raidra (talk) 15:45, January 11, 2016 (UTC)

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No you aren't overstepping your boundries. If you were, I'd let you know. I've been working on a Pokemon fanfiction to keep my writing skills sharp. This fanfiction is basically a take on Pokemon that's geared towards an older crowd like teenagers and adults. Sure the Pokemon Adventures manga had its dark moments but that was still mostly geared towards kids. The fanfic will be broken up into seperate episodes. Here's a basic idea of what the fanfic will be like:

"This fanfic deals with topics like divorce, religion, the dangers of wild pokemon, etc. I have added a lot of development to both the protagonist and her mother. The protagonist (Emily) has a father and we do get to see how he interacts with his family before the divorce. He was a gym leader in what is implied to be the Johto region who gets kicked out of his home and moves to "The region where the Nidoran roam." (Possibly the Kanto region). After picking up medicine for her mother's teaching assistant named Albert in Brasswood City, Emily learns the true reason for her mother's divorce and becomes crushed, thinking it's her fault her father spent more time with her than her mother and made her felt like she wasn't part of the family, and after getting someone else to deliver the medicine and runs away to find her father. Along they way, she befriends a shiny Mareep that she names Eddy and encounters all sorts of pokemon who become her allies during her quest to reunite with her father."

That's the basic plot so far.

I have the main character sheets done and a nearly complete plot outline of the first episode. I have someone who is interested in making concept art for the fanfic. I don't know if I should make it into a manga. I might consider that option if I can get an artist who would be willing to do that for me.

Before you ask, no. It won't be posted on the Creepypasta wiki. I might create a site for it through Weebly or use a website like Blogger to post it.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   02:37, January 12, 2016 (UTC)

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Perhaps I can explain this better in the actual episode. You see, one of the main settings is the Johto region. However, it takes place in a remote area of the region that is slowly expanding. I got the idea from a Pokemon hack called Pokemon Glazed where, after exploring the Tunod region, you go to the Johto region and there are a couple of town added to the map. One town contains a dark type gym and the other town has a church dedicated to Arceus. There was also a non denominational church in Hearthome City in the Sinnoh region, you know one of the few buildings where no music played. I'm kind of excited that you're going to look at my story. I won't rush you though.

The fanfiction was inspired by my disapointment in a manga called Pokemon Reburst that a lot of people had built up to be a pokemon story that was for older audiences like teenagers and adults. My main issue was that it barely had anything to do with Pokemon and relied too much on Shonen cliches.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   19:54, January 12, 2016 (UTC)

Story
Okay, I have it copied and pasted onto a file! Hopefully I'll have it read and reviewed by tomorrow. Unless something happens, I'll be done before the fourteenth. I like stories that are more about emotion and atmosphere, as you can tell by my own stories.

What's even worse is when they say, "This is a new game, and since we want people to win, we've put rubber on the claw to make it easier" (or however they word it). Gah! You're just creating the illusion of it being easier to play! Besides, even if you've really made it easier to win, you're pretty much admitting it's hard to win without the extra rubber!

"Who are you waving at?" "No one, Granma." Raidra (talk) 22:41, January 12, 2016 (UTC)
 * My review is posted! Also, yeah, I miss arcades.  There used to be one in the mall, but it closed. :-( At least I occasionally get to go to a place with some games. Raidra (talk) 01:56, January 13, 2016 (UTC)

My pleasure! I was happy to do it. I left a comment on the story (though most of it is repeating what I said on the thread). It's interesting to learn what influenced the story, and I have to say I can appreciate your "When in doubt, do it 50/50" style. :-D

Another interesting thing is I created a minor character (for my comics) that also took a bullet to the head. He'll a defense attorney/investigator (in the style of Perry Mason) who was shot while trying to protect a client. While unconscious/in surgery he had a vision of an angel saying his desire to help the innocent and punish the guilty would be rewarded. He still has the bullet in his brain, but he now has a power I call "guilty aura"- he makes others feel uncomfortable based on their level of guiltiness. Someone who's innocent will feel fine while those who are guilty of wrongdoing will feel anywhere from mildly uncomfortable to seriously tormented based on what they've done. In any case, good luck in the contest! Let me know how you do. Raidra (talk) 20:39, January 13, 2016 (UTC)

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Aww Dammit! Must be that waskly Delibird up to its hijinks of stealing letters. It's infamous for raiding the Sesame Street letter cabinet. Poor Cookie Monster was never the same again.

Oh sorry what was I talking about? Oh yeah, the pasta. I might have fixed that mistake but I can certainly look again. Speaing of Delibird, I'm thinking it could be a possible comedic rival character in the fanfic. The Delibird and Emily will have sort of a Javair/Jean Val Jean sort of relationship where the Delibird stole a loaf of bread Emily was carrying with her and Emily tries to catch it whenever it shows up. Emily will then develop a hatred for Delibird to a point where if anyone even mentions Delibird, she will get extremely angry, kind of like NC did when someone said Bat Credit Card.

Though to me, the idea seems kind of stupid but I want to add a bit of comedy in the fanfic to balance out some of the heavier stuff. I might come up with some better ideas in the future.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   23:45, January 12, 2016 (UTC)

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I goofed. I meant to spell it as Basswood City, not Brasswood.

Avgn: What were you thinking?!

Maybe I could try and work a Delibird into a later episode of the series.

I'm also still working on the first episode plot outline.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   20:41, January 13, 2016 (UTC)

Re: Comics
~flips coin to determine whether or not to answer~ ;-)

Thanks! I have to admit that some of my characters are rip-offs of other characters (including Batman and Two-Face), but yeah, I don't want to have a bunch of cliches with powers everyone's seen a million times. It gets boring. "Oh, yet another super-strong character? Whoopee." That's one of the reasons I read about different characters & genres and visit the Superpower wiki regularly- to get inspiration for cool and different powers I can give my characters. Thanks to that website and other sources I've been inspired to create several new characters, such as a half-man, half-crow hybrid that transforms into ashes, a guy that can create a force field that can reduce the damage a target takes, and a woman who can change into a werejaguar. Personality goes a long way, too.

I hadn't heard, but it would be so cool if they could get Mark Hamill and Kevin Conroy to do voice-work for The Killing Joke! I just hope the visual style is like the first three seasons of Batman:The Animated Series and not like the fourth season, the one that ran on Kids WB (I think they called that season Batman: Gotham Knights, like they called the third season The Adventures of Batman & Robin). My friend Nick sent me a photocopy about the Kids WB cartoon, and we agreed that we hated the changes they'd made. He joked, "I don't know what's worse- that Robin's now a moppet, or that Poison [Ivy] now has a head that gets wedged in doorways." He did like the Scarecrow redesign though, noting that the character "finally looks scary and not like an unpopped popcorn kernel."

Ha! I hadn't thought of it that way, but you're right. Though my comics can be serious at times (For instance, I did an issue about heroin addiction), overall the tone is lighthearted, and there are plenty of humorous touches. To me the funniest moment in my comics is a scene in which a supervillain is talking to his henchman. Gloating about his latest plot, the supervillain asks, "I need your honest opinion, Tibal." Tibal, still smiling, replies, "I think you're a sinful winebibber, master," and the supervillain snaps, "Not about that, you twit!" I'm also going to introduce a superhero team called The Loser League. You know the Justice League of America? Yeah, these aren't those guys. Raidra (talk) 01:02, January 14, 2016 (UTC)
 * Oh, Batman:The Animated Series was the best! Well, the first three seasons were the best!  I liked a couple episodes of TNABR, though.
 * I think the Loser League will be the only superhero team in history that holds rent parties to help pay for the mortgage on their superhero hideout (If you don't know, a rent party is where people throw a party at their house or apartment and charge admission in order to raise rent money). I'm making a Who's Who Guide for my characters, and some time ago I actually posted the entries for the Loser Leaguers on the talk page of my buddy Tyber Z. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_talk:Tyberzannisultra#Loser_League_roster
 * I'd like to talk more, but I'm nursing my head (It's not hurting, just touchy), so it'll have to wait. In the meanwhile, here's a description of that character I mentioned.  He can reform himself after turning to ashes, and he can also take a semi-tangible form (one resembling his normal body as opposed to a cloud of ashes).  Wouldn't it be something if the character couldn't, though?  It would lead to one or two events- a comedy scene or a heart-wrenching sacrifice scene.  It's fascinating how some situations could be either tragic or comedic based on how they're played.  One time I noted, "There are certain plots which could either be the plot of a horror movie or the plot of a comedy. It depends on how the plot is handled," and another time I noted, "A lot of the elements in the Home Alone movies would fit perfectly in horror movies if played straight."

Cinder

Secret identity- Casey Brendon

Birthplace- New Jersey

Occupation- printer/jack-of-all-trades

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- intelligence, ash manipulation, ash breath, ash transformation, heat invulnerability, radiation invulnerability

Status- member of Basilisk, member of Re’em, member of Shophetim

First appearance- KK#62

Personality- Cinder has a mysterious and roguish personality, though he has also displayed devotion and selflessness. He frequently smiles, even in battle. He has claimed that he has trust issues, but chosen not to elaborate. He can be friendly, but even then he remains somewhat guarded. The only ones he seems to feel comfortable around are his fellow Basilisk/Re’em members and members of Shophetim. He felt comfortable around the heroes, including the X-tra Weird Files, even before he reformed and joined their ranks. While rarely displaying anger, he has shown aggression in that he has no qualms about attacking those who confront him.

Appearance- Cinder is a crow man. He has black feathers, three tufts of black hair, a sloping gray beak, eyes with grey sclera and large black irises or pupils, and a short tail consisting of three tail feathers. He has feathery wings and legs which are smooth and gray from the upper thighs down. Each of his hands has three fingers and a thumb while each foot has two clawed toes at the front and a curved, clawed toe on the back of the heel. In ash form his eyes appear to be solid light grey. He wears a gray hooded sweatshirt, very dark blue pants, and a reddish-brown belt.

Entry- Little is known about Casey Brendon, the mysterious crow man known as “Cinder”. One thing that is known is that he has the formidable ability to control, breathe, and transform into ashes. Feeling that Basilisk was the perfect place for him, he accepted Dart Tongue’s invitation to join and went on to become a chief, first in Basilisk and then in Re’em. The rogue exhibits some anti-social tendencies, but serves Re’em and Shophetim with dedication.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Cinder is intelligent and has the ability to manipulate ashes. In addition to creating attacks such blowing ash into on opponent’s face, he can form objects such as shields, daggers, and whips out of ashes. He can also breathe ashes and transform his body into living ashes. Because of this, he can inhale ash and smoke without any ill effects. He is also immune to the effects of radiation, flames, and extreme heat.

Weaknesses- Cinder is susceptible to extreme cold and many of the same weaknesses as an ordinary person, such as toxic fumes and sonic attacks. If one or both of his wings is injured, he cannot fly.

Trivia Raidra (talk) 17:11, January 14, 2016 (UTC)
 * I came up with this character after visiting the Superpower Wiki, which has a few ash-related powers. He was also influenced by the Native American (specifically the Lenape or Delaware Indian) legend of the Rainbow Crow.  The legend states that the crow once had colorful feathers and a beautiful voice, but his heroic delivery of fire to the Earth, by flying with a flaming stick in his beak, caused him to have soot-colored feathers and a hoarse voice.
 * “Casey” is an Old English name meaning “Valorous” or “Strong” and “Brendon” is an Irish name meaning “Fire-brand” or “Lively”.

It's all the time. He could casually walk up to a blast furnace or a nuclear reactor in normal form, stick his hand inside, and not suffer any damage or ill effects. I decided that invulnerability to heat and radiation would be a secondary power. It's related to his ash abilities, but like I said, it's effective all the time. I used to have a book called Dragons, Dragons by Eric Carle which featured poems about various creatures from myth, legend, and folklore (I donated it to a relative so she could read it to the children she babysits). It had a cool picture of the Rainbow Crow. Its body had turned black, but its wings were still colored, making for a striking visual.

Thanks! I hope you like the others. I'm working on a new addition to The Houseguest series, but it'll be a while before I'm done. The neat thing about Pathos was I came up with the character and his powers myself (though I'll admit there are characters with similar powers).

I just saw your response to my comment. It's cool when writers share details like why they made certain decisions. I can't talk long, so I'll catch you lat- Oh, my gosh, your avatar ate spicy peppers! Try guzzling chocolate milk! That usually works for me! Raidra (talk) 14:31, January 15, 2016 (UTC)

News that is good!
I got that episode outline finished: http://pastebin.com/Uu8svNTe

I'm also trying to get back to working on my Haunting Hour reviews. The one I'm currently working on is the review for the episode "Pumpkinhead". It's the 5th episode in the 2nd season if you're curious.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   19:47, January 15, 2016 (UTC)

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Luckily for you, I'm fixing the errors as we speak. I've fixed a few spelling errors and added how the samurai girl disguised her voice. I'm going to look into the taste problem and see what I can do. Maybe I can have the protagonist hide somewhere like the closet and then slowly head towards the bathroom while brathing heavily. Or maybe she can also quietly hyperventilate I'm not sure yet.

I've also finished my latest Haunting Hour review and I plan to upload it soon. I've also started on another Haunting Hour episode that from what I heard combines two Goosebumps books (Attack of The Mutant and The Blob That Ate Everyone) and makes it into a really great story and fantastic overall episode.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   22:08, January 15, 2016 (UTC)

I goofed... again...
I read your message again and realized that you were talking about the part after the protagonist watched the cold opening and went downstairs for something. I'm trying to think of how to fix that part and maybe the protagonist could hide in her closet for a bit until she feels safe to come out. I think that's what I'll go with for now unless you have something better.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   22:15, January 15, 2016 (UTC)

That's fine
I'm also going to review Hailey's pasta. I have other things too, which is why I still haven't started rapping about B:TAS even though I really want to. It might be just as well to wait a little because I'm thinking about adding a couple paragraphs to my story "Kumiho" (to provide more background on the character and his mental state).

I can understand that because I've seen comic book writers and whatnot who talk about developing a character decades after the fact, and end up misremembering. As for the second theory about Tomoko's expression, that actually happened to me the other night! I had to psyche myself up to go to the bathroom and back. You read creepy stuff at night, and suddenly you have to cheer yourself on like Dora the Explorer just to make a simple bathroom trip (You can do it!). This is exactly why I wrote "Periodic Nyctophobia". Raidra (talk) 00:09, January 16, 2016 (UTC)

Re:
I actually only read about a third of it before deciding to just fix the dialogue errors. I think you know the rule, but using a period to close a line of dialogue only works if it's the true end of the sentence. If you continue the sentence by, say, identifying the speaker, then you can't use a period. As for leaving negative comments, I would do so if you really wanted, but my avoidance isn't as simple as wanting to be nice. As arrogant as it may sound, I don't really trust the average person to know what they're talking about or even to be honest, so I avoid leaving anything overly negative that others may draw from, whether it be repeating what I say or simply influencing their perception of the story. Of course this doesn't apply to a problem user or someone who doesn't appear to give a damn about improving their writing, which I believe you've recently witnessed.

Also, don't ever worry about asking for my opinion. If I didn't know you or didn't feel like you were serious about your work then I wouldn't likely be as welcoming, but neither of those apply to you. With that being said, just know that I may not be able to fulfill the request for any number of reasons. I'll try to finish your most recent story, but I will tell you that I struggled to stay involved. It is without a doubt an improvement over the last one, but there is a lot of fluff and the flow is off. There were some sentences that I just wanted to erase because they were overly complicated and seemed forced. For example: "The wind continued to rush against Clyde as he made his way toward the destination that he intended upon being life-changing for him." You also go on to use the word "destination" again in the next sentence. A lot of it feels like you're trying a bit too hard to be descriptive or wordy, and it ends up coming across as awkward/unnatural. I believe you have the ability to avoid this, because I see too much potential to feel otherwise, but I think you need to get out of your own way and quit thinking so much. You're losing yourself by attempting to apply all the advice you've read. I see this a lot. It's why I don't hand out advice all that often anymore (well, that, and I have no idea what I'm talking about).

I'm not really sure how to explain how I feel when I read your work, but I'll try. I see someone with a great amount of ambition, clearly the imagination of a writer, and a very open mind. The problem is that I feel like you haven't had that "Ah ha!" moment that needs to happen before things really start clicking. I don't think I've had that moment either, but I feel like I know it when I see it. Not saying that you'll magically start writing gems, but it will start coming more naturally and appearing more natural to the reader. I actually feel this way about a few users, so it's not just you. All I can say is definitely keep going, you're certainly improving, and I really do see a lot of potential. Really hoping I don't appear supercilious after saying all this, because I can assure you that's not who I am (unless you're a douche bag ; ) For what it's worth, I'm also medicated and definitely feel altered. I might be typing nothing but the letter Q over and over for all I know. This scene from Beerfest comes to mind: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i0mFLoL3NeI

The best advice I can give for you personally is to stop giving a fuck. I know that sounds like lazy advice, but I really feel like you need to let go of something. You've got a good foundation and a lot of other useful tools, now it's time to relax and start moving past emulating others or following rules. Might be a good idea for you to start keeping a journal, if you don't already, so you have a place where you can write naturally without the worry of anyone else seeing/judging it. It also wouldn't hurt to take that journal and every morning write a few paragraphs written by great writers to help you get a feel for things. Of course I'm not suggesting you imitate anyone, but it could be another piece of the puzzle necessary to get to that next level. I feel like you're right on the edge.

I realize you didn't really ask for all this rambling, but I did it anyway. Hope you find something useful in all of this.

Jay Ten (talk) 00:18, January 16, 2016 (UTC)


 * Kek. Was wondering if you'd catch that contradiction. In my defense, my advice doesn't really involve telling you how you should write.  Too many people think it's all about the rules, and to an extent the rules are a necessary evil, but there's so much more to it.  I'm more concerned whether something works or not, as opposed to whether it follows the generally accepted guidelines (I actually disagree with a lot of the rules).  Once I realize the writer has a basic understanding of grammar/spelling/punctuation/etc, I move onto judging if I think it works.  You'll find that the people that have done an extensive amount of reading will be a lot more open to being different and a lot less worried about the rules (unless you're dealing with a die-hard pedant).


 * The problem is that the average reader wants cookie-cutter stories and isn't remotely interested in anything other than entertainment, but you have to write for them to an extent because that's the bulk of your audience. It's a difficult situation, really.  You're writing not only for yourself but for everyone else, but only about one out of ten people knows anything about writing, and out of those people only about one out of a hundred actually knows as much as they think they do (you just thought, Yeah, like this guy, didn't you?).  I guess what I'm saying is take all advice with a grain of salt (even mine), as they say.  People will act like they know what your story needs or know what you're doing wrong, but all too often they're just trying to look smart or imitate others.  If what they say makes sense to you then by all means take it to heart, but as I've already said just be careful not to lose yourself.


 * As for reading your story goes, I still intend to. It's not all about enjoyment for me.  I wanna see if there are any sections that stand out one way or another and also to see how it comes together as a whole.  I honestly hate most of what I write and almost never want anyone to read it, but I keep doing it and occasionally put something on the site because that's the only way I'll know what works or doesn't.  Just reading a third of your story and stopping isn't really fair because for all I know it might slowly improve as it progresses.


 * This discussion (meaning me vomiting letters all over the screen) has made me want to restore something I wrote a while back, but I removed it because that's just what I do. I don't personally care for it, but it might be a decent example of a few of the things I've mentioned.  I truly didn't give a fuck while writing it and had no intention to show it to anyone, but October showed up about the same time I finished it so I said "what the hell".  It doesn't follow a lot of the rules, but it seems to work for what it is.  Maybe reading it will help you see what I mean by some of the things I've said and give you an example of what not giving a fuck looks like.  I wouldn't normally recommend it but you're older and I think you'll get it (wow, I sound condescending).  I'm out of my body right now watching as I type this and keep trying to smack myself in the back of the head, but my disembodied self appears to have the texture, and sadly the smell, of a fart.  I guess I mean I wouldn't recommend it to just anyone.  It's very NSFW.  If you don't like those kinds of things, then don't read it.  I can try to find some other examples.  Ned the Nihilist: A Misanthropic Monologue is the story.  There's a little bit of everything in there.  It's also just one big, craptastic dose of irony.  Also a lot of symbolism in there, such as the rate it speeds up, but it's all up for interpretation. If nothing else, it's a great example of how not to write.


 * Did you watch that video? I love that scene, and it honestly sums me up.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 16:29, January 16, 2016 (UTC)

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I'm afraid to add another chapter since I don't want to make my story seem longer than it actually is but I'm still willing to add one. I'm also trying to find the ideal length for a whole chapter. Maybe it can be a certain amount of paragraphs.

Speaking of the samurai, I like the idea of having it force the protagonist to watch the remainder of the episode. Maybe the protagonist is restrained by the samurai as well and tried to get out of said restraint as she is watching the remainder of the episode. When the episode ends, the protagonist breaks out of the restraint and runs out of the house towards the lake while the samurai is chasing her. She swims as fast as she can until she passes out. After this point, I'm thinking one of two things can happen. 1. The protagonist wakes up in her bed and the events of the story was revealed to be a nightmare. 2. She ends up in the hospital where we learn that the events of the story were all in the protagonist's head and implies that the protagonist has some sort of undiagnosed mental disorder. I'm leaning towards the nightmare ending but I don't know if I'll have to change certain details of the story for that.

I wanted to upload my Haunting Hour review last night but got sidetracked (Is that how you spell that word or is it sightracked?) by other things. I'll try and have it uploaded sometime tonight.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   22:54, January 16, 2016 (UTC)

Got That Link!
Here: http://littleazusblog.blogspot.com/2016/01/every-haunting-hour-ever-27-pumpkinhead.html

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   23:42, January 16, 2016 (UTC)

Kumiho preview
I thought of a way you could go ahead and read "Kumiho"- by me giving a preview of the part I plan to expand.

Here’s the way the part of the story reads now.

''He reflected as he tried to rest. Genie had told him that his willpower was the key to his recovery. In that case, he thought, his recovery would be a fast one because he was determined to beat this thing. His addiction had cost him so much, including his friendship with Kim. Time and time again he flashed back to that night that Kim had discovered him using and declared their friendship was over. He understood Kim’s hurt and anger. He had lied straight to his face that he wasn’t using, and then he was caught in the act of being injected. Estes had blown it big time. Now he was determined to do whatever it took to get clean, to regain everything the drugs had taken from him.''

Here’s the planned expansion.

''He reflected as he tried to rest. Before beginning the treatment, Genie, Van, and Estes had a lengthy counseling session. At one point Genie turned to Van and asked, “Could you excuse us, please?” Van nodded, arose, and exited the room. Genie turned back to Estes and explained, “While I want you two to share your experiences to help each other, I also want you to know that you can trust me to be confidential. I know this is a difficult question, but it has to be asked. Have you attempted or considered suicide during this ordeal?”''

''In the minutes that followed, Estes reflected on a number of things. Genie waited patiently. Finally Estes replied, “I haven’t attempted, no.” He took another long pause before admitting, “I have thought about it, though. I can’t drown because of my powers, but there are other ways I could do it. Shoot, the arsenal has a bunch of weapons I could use, not to mention the lab. I could slash my wrists or impale myself. I could shoot myself, or jab myself with so many drugged darts I wouldn’t recover. I could get some cord or chain and hang myself. I could get some gas grenades, or one of the tanks, and turn my room into a gas chamber. For that matter, I could start my car and lie down by the exhaust pipe.” Tears started to trickle down his face.''

“Take your time,” Genie told him gently.

''Estes wiped his eyes, expelled a trembling sigh, and gathered himself before continuing. “Ripley has been making me do extra work recently, and he’s made it a point to have me accompany him. I see now that it’s not just cracking down on me. It’s also about making sure I’m preoccupied and not… entertaining these thoughts.”''

“He wants you to know you’re still useful to him,” noted Genie.

“Yeah,” agreed Estes, ignoring his fresh tears.

''Genie had told him that his willpower was the key to his recovery. In that case, he thought, his recovery would be a fast one because he was determined to beat this thing. His addiction had cost him so much, including his friendship with Kim. Time and time again he flashed back to that night that Kim had discovered him using and declared their friendship was over. Shortly afterward he and Kim were receiving orders from Ripley. After receiving his orders, Kim turned to leave. He passed by Estes without a single word or even a glance, as though he didn’t exist. Estes had seen movies and television shows in which characters, to show strong sorrow, had suddenly brought their hands to their chests as though suffering pangs of chest pain. He always thought that was corny. However, after Kim passed him by without acknowledging him, he felt a pang of pain jab through his heart, and he found himself bringing his hand to his chest. He understood Kim’s hurt and anger. He had lied straight to his face that he wasn’t using, and then he was caught in the act of being injected. Estes had blown it big time. Now he was determined to do whatever it took to get clean, to regain everything the drugs had taken from him.''

Her younger brother? Ouch. Oh, well. I'll take a lovable goofball over a whiny brat any day! Take care until we have the time to rap about B:TAS! Raidra (talk) 00:32, January 17, 2016 (UTC)

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So for my fanfic, I'm trying to use Weebly to create a site exclusively for it much like Dorkpool did for his riffs but on mobile, the site creator is nearly impossible to use. On and off freezing when you try and pick a theme for the site, glithes like crazy when trying to customize the site, and I feel like it does whatever it wants when you try to tap something. They have a mobile app but it's not much better. Maybe it works a lot better when you use a computer but Weebly seems like my only option that isn't too complex or costly. I think the blog option might be the best option for what I want to do.

So I started on the unsumarized version of my pokemon fanfic Here:

"Pokemon Garnet: The Story of Emily Episode 1

The room was dimly lit and cluttered with all sorts of plush creatures taking up space on the shelves, toy chests, and even on a little wooden computer desk leaning up against the center right wall. To some, this may seem like the room of the happiest child in the world. Unfortunatley, the owner of all these toys was kneeling down on her bed and sobbing quietly to herself. At that very moment, a flood of memories were racing through her mind. In these memories, there was a young girl, a grown woman, and a mucslebound man getting along and enjoying each other's company, especially in the ones where the musclebound man and grown woman were teaching the young girl various things about the Pokemon world. There were also memories of the young girl and grown woman cheering on the musclebound man as he battled various people in a huge arena covered in red, teal, and light brown colouring.

As the memories raced by, the grown woman gradually faded into the background until in one memory, the grown woman and musclebound man started to argue. In fact, a few memories after had reselmbled this one. Eventually, a memory of the grown woman defeating the musclebound man in 2 out of 3 sanctioned battles had came into fruition as well as a memory of the musclebound man packing up his things and whispering to the young girl "If you need me, I'll be in the region where the Nidoran roam". Just then, another rush of memories flew through her mind but these seemed to go by faster than the others. These memories consisted of the grown woman whacking the young girl in the face so hard that she was knocked to the ground. However, these memories were followed up with memories of the grown woman crying and giving the young girl various plushies.

As she remembered these moments, she became furious and threw her pillow across the room as hard as she could. She then started to sob again and grabbed her Cyndaquil plushie from the left side of her bed and hugged it tightly. Because the plush felt as though she was holding a cloud, she started to calm down a bit. She proceeded to straighten her back, fold her hands together, and look up at the dark blue ceiling.

"Arceus" the girl said, "Please help me find a way to start Pokemon training early. I just can't deal with this anymor---" Just as the girl was about to finish her prayer, a woman had entered her room and quickly flipped on the lights. "Emily, is everything okay in here?" The woman asked with a shaky voice. Emily yelped loudly and quickly crawled under her bed. "Please don't hurt me mom!" Shouted Emily. Her mother sighed heavily and said "I promise I won't hurt you, okay."

"Are you sure this time?" Asked Emily. Her mother had said yes and also told her that she wouldn't leave until Emily came out from under the bed. After a few moments, Emily slowly crawled out and inched her way towards her mother. Emily's mother gave her a big hug and rubbed her back gently. "The whole separation thing is getting to you too, huh?" Emily's mother asked. Emily nodded slowly and whimpered a bit."

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   23:37, January 19, 2016 (UTC)

Anime List
I checked out that website you mentioned. Many of those I'd never heard of, but I was able to piece together a list. I’ve also seen a little of what I think was either Gundam Wing or Mobile Suit Gundam, and I’ve seen bits and pieces of other random anime too. Like I said, I'll be back to rap about Batman: The Animated Series when I'm able. Take care! Raidra (talk) 00:28, January 21, 2016 (UTC)
 * Regularly watched- Digimon, Naruto, Pokemon, that Grimm's fairy tales show I mentioned earlier
 * More than one episode- Bleach, Bobobo-bo-bo-bobo (I don't know if I spelled that correctly, but wow, that was one bizarre show), Dragonball Z, G-Force, One Piece, Yu-gi-oh, Zoltron
 * At least one episode- Inuyasha, Zatch Bell
 * At least a little- Akame Ga Kill, Bakugan, Hellsing Ultimate (What little I saw was violent, but also poignant), Kill la Kill, Tenchi Munyo

With your description, I was able to determine it was Gundam Wing. Thanks! I remembered a couple more I saw a couple episodes of- Sailor Moon and Card Captors. I didn't care for Sailor Moon, but Card Captors was pretty good.

Okay, I finally have a little time! Oh, my gosh, where do I start? B:TAS was awesome! It had heart, it had excitement, it was great! It portrayed both sides of Batman- a relentless night stalker and a compassionate protector. We need a multi-faceted Batman like the one portrayed in B:TAS, not some one-dimensional wreck!

My favorite episode was one that a lot of people thought was terrible- "The Last Laugh". http://www.tv.com/shows/batman-the-animated-series/the-last-laugh-68576/ I had a two-part issue ripping off this episode, but that's a story for another day. When I was in high school I often had insomnia. I had three tapes that I watched depending on how restless I felt- the movie Cool as Ice (http://www.badmovies.org/movies/coolasice/) for long periods, the episode of The A-Team with Boy George and the Culture Club (called "Cowboy George") for medium periods, and this episode for short periods. I saw "The Last Laugh" so often that I could quote it word for word. You can find a review I did here- http://www.tv.com/shows/batman-the-animated-series/the-last-laugh-68576/reviews/ Mine is the one headed "No offense to those who thought this episode was only mediocre (we all have our own tastes, likes, and dislikes, after all), but I loved it" By Evernut, Jul 15, 2006. Also, I posted a lot of the mistakes listed in the trivia section too- http://www.tv.com/shows/batman-the-animated-series/the-last-laugh-68576/trivia/. Hey, when you see an episode that much, you notice things! There's also a mistake I haven't submitted yet. The warning is that "Lengthy exposure to the gas will result in permanent insanity." However, insanity is a legal term, not a medical one. It should have said, "Lengthy exposure to the gas will result in permanent psychosis," or something to that effect.

Another one of my favorites is "Nothing To Fear" (http://www.tv.com/shows/batman-the-animated-series/nothing-to-fear-68571/). Shoot, I may rip-off that one too! There are so many other great ones, but I can talk about them later. Which are your favorites? Raidra (talk) 01:33, January 22, 2016 (UTC)

Thanks. Thankfully I don't have it as often as I used to. I think it was the stress of high school. At the same time I had headaches about three or four times a week. X-C I mentioned earlier that I still have some headaches, but they're less frequent, which I'm thankful for.

The relationship between Bruce/Batman and Harvey/Two-Face was great. There was a very effective scene in the two-parter in which Dent became Two-Face. The psychiatrist hypnotized Harvey so she could speak with "Bad Harv", and during a lightning flash you briefly saw Harvey as Two-Face. It was both chilling and awesome. There was an issue of a Batman comic book (I think the series was called Batman Black & White, but I could be wrong) which had a Harvey Dent influenced by that series. Harvey had reconstructive surgery and got engaged to a nice girl, but it turned out she had an evil twin. The description may sound corny, but trust me- they crafted a story equal to a Greek tragedy.

Oh, we could start a whole topic about great Joker moments! In fact, I'll have to do that since there are so many. They're coming so fast! We'd have to do one just for the one-liners, too. That "Which one?" line is from "The Strange Secret of Bruce Wayne" (http://www.tv.com/shows/batman-the-animated-series/the-strange-secret-of-bruce-wayne-68829/), but I agree- that line was great! It's one of the best in the whole show. I'm glad you like "The Last Laugh" too. Another great moment was when The Joker moors the gas-emitting garbage scow/submarine and tells his lackeys, "Now everyone remember where we're parked!"

That Scarecrow episode you mentioned was "Dreams in Darkness" (http://www.tv.com/shows/batman-the-animated-series/dreams-in-darkness-68831/), and yeah, that was a good one. The snake/wire scene shows something about Batman, which is his ability to overcome obstacles. It's boring when a hero is some unfeeling juggernaut that is never seriously challenged. That episode also had a great ending. With The Scarecrow defeated, Batman takes an antidote which will put him to sleep for a couple days (That's why he didn't take it earlier- he didn't want to doze while The Scarecrow was still terrorizing innocent people), and he comments about how he feels secure. It then shows a bat hanging from a stalactite, and its wings forming a protective shadow over Bruce. Beautiful.

Oh, I want to talk about so much and there's so little time! I'm putting this in your hands. Give me a B:TAS topic (specific villains, specific episodes, one-liners, funny moments, beautiful moments, etc.) each day or two, or whenever you're able, and let's talk about them one by one. We'll be talking and reminiscing for weeks, maybe months! Raidra (talk) 03:29, January 23, 2016 (UTC)

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Sorry I haven't gotten back to you last night but I was very sleepy. Anyway, I just finished another Haunting Hour review and I hope I can get it onto my blog as soon as possible. In terms of grammer, there are a few changes I'm going to make to improve it when it comes to the Pokémon fanfic.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   19:07, January 22, 2016 (UTC)

Re: Hi
There is a new message for you on my talk page!

ᐃᓐᓂᕈᖅᑐᖅ 21:42, January 22, 2016 (UTC)

Regarding The Generation 2 Elite Four
With the generation 2 Elite Four, a couple of questions still remain.

1. Why is Bruno still in the Elite 4?

2. What happened to Agatha?

What if I could answer those two questions at the same time in a later episode of Pokemon Garnet?

Here's the backstory: A couple of years before the events of Pokemon Garnet and 1 year before the events the Gold and Silver games, the Elite Four was doing its yearly training camp with one another. Lance was teamed up with Lorelei and Agatha was teamed up with Bruno. The league champion would be host of the camp and would challenge the Elite Four member who did the best in the camp.

Within the Elite Four, Bruno was considered a joke amongst the members and because of this, he got picked last and was originally teamed up with Lorelei. However, Lorelei hated the idea of working with Bruno so much, she demanded to be teamed up with Lance and got her request granted.

Thinking she could help out Bruno and teach him how to be a better trainer, Agatha volunteered to be Bruno's partner. When Bruno lost to Agatha, he got extremely upset about it. Agatha tried to stearnly tell him that his defeatist additude and refusal to make the nesessary changes to his Pokémon team is what resulted in him not only losing to her but to him being the laughing stock of the Elite Four.

With the shock of finally seeing his mistakes and how pathetic he was, Bruno became enraged, and attacked Agatha. He picked her up and threw her against the wall so hard that she had died just a few moments after the impact, despite Bruno's efforts to try and heal her injuries. When everyone went over to see what happened, Bruno wasn't hesitant to break down and confess what he did.

Lance meekly told Bruno that they would have to report him to the authorities. However, Bruno fiercley rejected that proposal and yelled about how he didn't need anymore punishment added onto his guilt.

Lance once again told Bruno that he would be reported to authorties but this time in a firmer tone. Bruno became extremely frustrated and destroyed any and every communication device he could find within the area. Bruno then ordered everyone to keep Agatha's death quiet by saying that she has retired and gone back to her hometown.

After this incident happened, he took Agatha's advice and did his best to reform himself as a trainer. However, with Agatha's premature death, became possessed by Agatha's ghost Pokemon, which released themselves from their pokeballs, and while he could overpower the possession most of the time, the pokemon would assume control and subject him to painful memories of the day he killed Agatha.

When Emily challenged Bruno and lost, the ghost Pokemon overtook him and attacked Emily in the same way he did Agatha. However, while Emily still got injured, the impact wasn't as bad with heavily padded walls and Eddy was able to carry Emily and escape and heal her injuries in time.

This might change the closer we get to this point in the story.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   00:58, January 24, 2016 (UTC)

Batman:TAS
That happens to me too- both sometimes misremembering moments from shows or whatnot and sometimes having trouble nodding off. If I get obsessed with working on something, it may be one or two in the morning before I go to bed (or go back to bed, in some cases). When that happens I lie awake for a while because I still want to work on whatever it is, and then I'll find myself waking up. Other times I wake up in the middle of the night and one thing or another keeps me awake for a while. One time I had a particularly bad bout of insomnia caused by reading scary stories. I used it as fodder for two different moments in my comics, so at least I got something out of it! Comedian Jon Stewart once joked that he sometimes lost sleep over things like, "Did I forget to turn off the stove...in college?"

I haven't read The Dark Knight Returns yet, but I have a Batman book showing a page from that part. It had great imagery (the angry, completely scarred Two-Face versus the sad, unscarred Harvey) & dialogue (Bruce/Batman noting that he saw a reflection) and really showed a lot about both characters & their relationship.

Oh, that episode with Batman and Harley teaming up was great! Ah, for the days when superhero cartoons could be fun and enjoyable and not be either some violent angst-fest or some mind-numbingly stupid joke! That was one of the best Harley episodes in my opinion, the other being that one in which she was released from Arkham, but unfortunately got into trouble. I loved the scene in which she was blowing bubble gum bubbles, wearing roller skates, and being pulled by two or three laughing hyenas on leashes. She can't understand why people are freaking out, and she offers, "I bet it's these clothes! I must look like a real geek!" When she goes inside the clothing store, she sees a former victim and decides to say hello. She says something to the effect of "Hey, remember when the Joker kidnapped you? I was the crazy clown girl holding the gun to your head!" Classic.

Shoot, take all the time you need! After all, you were patient with me. Good conversations like this can't be rushed, am I right? :-) Raidra (talk) 01:51, January 24, 2016 (UTC)


 * I have thoughts, but they'll have to wait because ironically I only got four hours of sleep last night. :-/ In the meantime, my latest story, "Fu Manchu's Serum" is up if you're interested. Here's to bat serum wishes and Joker fish dreams! Raidra (talk) 02:33, January 25, 2016 (UTC)

Even though she's done bad things, Harley really is kind of an innocent character. Like you say, there's no ill will- it's a deranged mind and an obsession with her "puddin'" that drives her to do these things. In any case, that episode had other funny parts too. One was when The Dynamic Duo brought The Scarecrow in raving. He stopped to exchange pleasantries with Harley, and when he resumed his insane rant. Robin noted, "I think he's getting better!" Then there was the part in which Batman rescued her, and she admitted to vomiting on his cape. I'm sure that's not the first time someone's barfed on Batman's cape, and it won't be the last! The ending was sweet too.

Oh, that part of "Beware the Gray Ghost" was great! It's a really human moment showing this great hero meeting one of his heroes. The ending was great too (Bruce telling him that The Gray Ghost was and still is one of his heroes, with the two smiling knowingly). Also, the casting of Adam West was inspired.

"Trial" was another great one.
 * Mad Hatter- I would have killed her first! Oops! ~whispers to Judge Joker~ Could that statement be stricken from the record?
 * Joker- "Record"!? Is someone supposed to be writing this down?!
 * (Batman's attorney sighs and holds head)

I'm tired again, so tomorrow morning I'll add my thoughts on Lock-Up and a couple other characters. Tune in, same Bat-channel!

I hope your head's better. I saw that you corrected a typo in "What Was Sacrificed". I appreciate that. I try to catch things myself, but I'm only human. Hey, as long as you like them and/or find them interesting in some way, I'm happy. :-D For my own reasons, I generally tell my thoughts on Banning's stories on his talk page- not the comments sections of the actual stories. I have a lot of half-human, half-animal characters in my comics- including a Batman rip-off that's literally half-man, half-bat. Obvious? Sure, but aren't most rip-offs? Next time I'll tell you about Bat-Hulk. Raidra (talk) 01:08, January 26, 2016 (UTC)
 * I just saw your comment on "Fu Manchu's Serum" and left a response. :-D Also, out of curiosity, since you mentioned the comedic elements, which parts did you especially like? I think the great line is Ripley jokingly replying, "No, it really was one of the most racist films ever made." Raidra (talk) 01:16, January 26, 2016 (UTC)

I'm glad your head's better! Yeah, the behind the eye ones are terrible!


 * I think Lock-Up was created for the show, and it was a great decision because he's a contrast that shows the kind of person Batman is. He cares about people, and he wants to stop injustice and help victims no matter who they are.  He's determined, but he doesn't cross lines to the point of becoming out-of-control.  The scenes in which the inmates were questioned about Lock-Up were funny too.  Wasn't there a scene in which Bruce trips Lock-Up?  Awesome.  On a related note, I think Scarface practically stole the show in "Trial", and that's saying something.  The version of The Ventriloquist and Scarface on B:TAS was the best.  It was great and original, and I was very disappointed to find out how terrible their depiction in the comics was.  Cripes, I hated everything about their portrayal in the comics. :-/ Well, at least the cartoon gave us a great portrayal!


 * Speaking of one-shot villains, a lot of people didn't like the episode with the Sewer King, but I liked it well enough. It might be because it touches something that happens in real-life- people who prey on runaways.  This creep was exploiting runaway children in order to satisfy his lust for power, and sadly many runaway children do meet people who exploit them even more terribly.  It was obvious that the children had been victims of abuse because at one point he asked them, "Do you want to go back where they hurt you?"  Luckily Batman rescued and reassured them.  The Batmobile had a great portrayal in that one too.  It had a feature that allowed it to be disguised as a dumpster, and there was also some kind of screen which lulled the boy to sleep.  Yeah, that Batmobile was money!


 * One of my favorite one-shots, though, was Condiment King, one of the comedians controlled by the Joker in "Make 'Em Laugh". There was the great scene with Batman driving along when the radio announces there was robber "armed with what's being described as a ketchup gun."  Batman noted, "It's going to be one of those nights." X-D I plan to rip that off in my own comics.  A couple vigilantes will be eating ice cream cones, the police radio will announce something weird, and they'll look at each other like, "What did we just hear?"  Incidentally, I found out that the MC in that episode was voiced by the late Richard Jeni.  That's part of the fun of re-watching these episodes- understanding references (to comics, art, pop culture, etc.) you missed earlier.  I found out that Harry Hamblin voiced Anthony Romulus, and thanks to that I can now recognize his voice whenever I hear it.  I literally found out last night that Michael Gross voiced a character in an episode, so that will be next on my watch list.


 * There's no shame in saying, "I didn't think So-and-so's performance was the best." What would be bad is if you said one thing when you really felt another.  I personally like the Batman film with Michael Keaton and Jack Nicholson, though I didn't care for how they made Jack the gunner who killed the Waynes.  I'm not much into superhero films for some reason, so it was maybe 2000 before I saw the whole movie.  Sometime before that I was talking with a friend (another comic book fan) on the phone and he asked, "Did you know that The Joker wasn't really the one who killed Bruce Wayne's parents?"  I was baffled and answered, "Yeah..."  He sensed the confusion in my voice and explained to me about the movie.


 * I don't read a lot of modern comics. Shoot, why read modern comics when you can read fun stuff like this? http://dc.wikia.com/wiki/Brave_and_the_Bold_Vol_1_68 I recall there being some line like, "Me am big chemical phenom!"  I photocopied a page for my friend (the one I mentioned earlier) and noted, "I love how they didn't even try!"


 * I'll try to review it tonight. I wondered how many people would get the MacGuffin joke!  I'm glad you did.  I'll catch you later, assuming that I don't have to dance with the Devil in the pale moonlight. Raidra (talk) 19:01, January 26, 2016 (UTC)
 * Ironically I have a headache tonight, so I'll just say two things for now. One- I left a post on your story thread.  Two- One time my father was in the room when the first Clock King episode was on.  When he introduced himself as "Temple Fugate", Dad laughed.  He realized that the name was a play on "tempus fugit," a Latin expression meaning "time flees".  Yeah, the depiction of the Clock King on B:TAS was the best.  His intelligence made him a definite challenge. Raidra (talk) 00:42, January 27, 2016 (UTC)
 * Thankfully it was gone when I woke up this morning. Thanks for the well-wishes, and as for the story, you're certainly welcome. :-D
 * I've read gruesome stuff about recent stories involving Batman and The Joker. Aren't they both currently dead?  Yeah, we'll see how long that lasts!  I'll have to comb through the B:TAS Joker episodes so we can talk about our favorite moments.  As a preview, there was that episode you mentioned in which it looked like some two-bit loser had killed Batman.  That one showed many sides of The Joker.  He was sad at the robbery when Batman didn't show, noting, "This time I really think he's... not coming."  He was so disheartened to think it might be over.  Then there was the combination funeral/murder, which he concluded by asking, "Well, that was fun!  Who wants Chinese?"  Classic Joker.  There was also a great exchange between Rupert Thorne and Batman's "killer".  "No one's that stupid, or that lucky!"  "I am!"  The ending was great too, with the loser walking along with pride as the other prisoners bragged about his reputation. Raidra (talk) 02:15, January 28, 2016 (UTC)

Re: Categories
As long as both are integral to the story, I see no issue. You might have to explain your reasoning to someone who's just patrolling new pages though. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:50, January 27, 2016 (UTC)


 * NP, thanks for the heads-up. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:54, January 27, 2016 (UTC)

RE: Name
Thanks Doom. I wouldn't have gotten that at all. Do you know what language that is?

JohnathanNash (talk) 00:49, January 29, 2016 (UTC)

New Batman post
I just thought I'd start a new post since the other one had gotten so long!

Thanks for the link! You're right- those scenes were really cool and thought-provoking. It's also interesting to think of Gordon taking over. The dynamic between Gordon and Wayne should be interesting.

I was going to tell one of my favorite moments from the HARDAC episodes, but I thought it would be interesting to keep quiet for now and see if you mentioned it first. Raidra (talk) 00:50, January 29, 2016 (UTC)


 * "De-aged"? "Mohawk"!?  Oy.  That ruined any chance I'd be interested in him as Batman.  That made me think, though, that it would be interesting for an over-the-hill character to play Batman.  It could be both a comedy and a celebration of human determination.  See, our ideas are so much better than what a lot of the professionals are coming up with.
 * Oh, that was the best of the robot episodes! It was sad when the scientist gently caused him to realize that he wasn't the real Batman, or even human.  He was alone and lost, and then he died a hero.  His silicon soul was noble.  R.I.P. you beautiful, confused robot.
 * In the original two-parter, I liked when Alfred told Batman, "I do wish you wouldn't be so rough with your toys!" and then, after the robot arms attacked him, told him, "I do wish your toys wouldn't be so rough with you!" Speaking of Alfred, there was a part in "His Silicon Soul" that I thought was stupid.  Realizing the Batman was a robot, Alfred retreated, donned a protective mask, and activated some kind of knock-out gas.  I thought, "Is he trying to gas a robot?!  That's one of the stupidest things ever done in this series!"  That was the only downside to the episode. Raidra (talk) 00:39, January 30, 2016 (UTC)

I know a few years ago there was a storyline about an attempt to create three possible replacement Batmen, and that went badly! Lesson learned- Never trust an evil scientist to churn out replacement superheroes for you!

That could be. I just know that whatever it was knocked Alfred out once the robot took his mask. Someone offered that maybe it was meant to provide a smokescreen. A flaw with that argument was that Alfred didn't take advantage if it to escape, but then again, maybe he was preparing something else. I dunno. I wish someone from the show would explain that part. For the record, the Batman rip-off in my comics has a gas which is harmless to organisms, but dissolves metal. He's used it to free himself from bonds and to destroy opponents' weapons without hurting himself or the opponent.

Ah, Kyodai Ken! My research shows he appeared in "Night of the Ninja", "Day of the Samurai", and one issue of the comic book based on the cartoon. Yep, he was a good one! He was cunning, and his battles with Bruce were good. What made the episodes for me wasn't just having a formidable opponent for Batman; it was also seeing Bruce's psychology. Those episodes showed Batman's humanity, self-doubt, and ability to overcome obstacles. The part where his sensei reassured him was sweet. I do have a couple more points, one good and one bad. The bad- In the scene in which Kyodai discovered the death point, he noted, "Ah, so that's where it is!" like it was some big surprise. Then it turned out to be the chest, which is pretty obvious. :-\ The good- At one point, the sensei's new student comments on the "shadow of the bat". I realized years later that was a reference to the current Batman comic book series Shadow of the Bat. Raidra (talk) 01:24, January 31, 2016 (UTC)
 * I was never big into Batman Beyond, but if they do make a live-action movie (which they probably will), they need to have the same opening the cartoon did- Batman weakened, threatening a criminal with a gun, and looking afterward like, "What am I becoming?" That was a very emotional scene.  I think I would have liked the series more if it had been more like that.  I caught the episode of Justice League Unlimited which had Amanda Waller and Terry talking about what led to him becoming Batman and the connection he had with Bruce.  That one also had a cameo by the Phantasm from Batman: Mask of the Phantasm.  Like you said, finding references is really awesome. :-D
 * Thanks for calling the metal-dissolving gas cool (I think that's what you were referring too). I saw an episode of Adventure Time with Finn & Jake with the line, "I can probably think of a reason why that's villainous if you gave me enough time. Maybe."  That's how we're looking at that scene.  "I can probably think of a reason why that's not stupid if you gave me enough time. Maybe."  C'mon, writers, don't do Alfred like that!  Alfred's cool!  While we see if we can come up with anything, how about some moments that put Alfred in a positive light?  I think the best was Alfred giving the pep talk in "Nothing to Fear," which introduced The Scarecrow.  Also, "I said I drew you a bath, sir."  C'mon, Bruce.  You were secretly amused by that.  Just admit it. Raidra (talk) 00:57, February 1, 2016 (UTC)

Your Translation is a Little Off
Well, my account's name is not milk crate. Great name though, I could always change to got milk. Also I'm buckled and good luck getting popular. You're a funny guy. Or was that sarcasm. I guess we will never know. Too obvious. Also I accidentially did 3 equals instead of 2. Didn't know to fix. Thanks, and good luck, my friend. Now you think I'm a русский Hitman.

တရားသူကြီးကို တစ်ဖက်သတ်အစွဲ (talk) 03:23, January 29, 2016 (UTC)

RE: Milk Carton
Hey Doom,

No need to apologize, there is no why I would have know if you were joking or not if I didn't see the message you left on my board and His. That is something that I would have done to someone that I know good enough to joke around with, so I take it as a complement that you can make that joke with me. (Not that we really ever talked on here, but whatever.) I did believe that was his name, so you had fooled me, and I had a pretty good chuckle about it once I was told otherwise.

By the way, if you want to look into some of the stories I've written it would be greatly appreciated. I like your writing style and think that you are one of the better authors on this site and some feed back from you would be great.

Best,

JohnathanNash (talk) 04:47, January 29, 2016 (UTC)

Workshop Review
Hey you gave me a review on an unfinished pasta I posted to Writer's Workshop, and you said you hoped I would finish it. Well, I have, so if you get a chance, I would like feedback on what was written. I also corrected some of the errors you and Rinskuro pointed out. Thanks. :)

Here is the link: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:521655#3

User:DarthWeezer1994 23:03, January 29, 2016 (UTC)

I crossed the line
Hey Doom,

I liked your story, and left a comment on it that goes into more detail then just saying that I liked it. If you have any more stories that you would like to me to look at just send me a message and I would be happy to read them and leave some feed back. I do have a habit to speak my mind, so if I say something you don't like, please don't take it personally, it is just my opinion, although I don't really foresee saying anything negative about your writing.

Best,

JohnathanNash (talk) 23:52, January 29, 2016 (UTC)

I'm devasted
I'm going to cry to my mommy now. Or is she dead. The story takes a darker turn down memory lane. Just messing with you I really don't care. Was a nice easy pun compared to the ominous message "stop commiting these crimes" which I may have interpreted as a death threat rather than a joke. Luckily I asked the sender instead of sending loads of hatemail which some people would sadly do.

တရားသူကြီးကို တစ်ဖက်သတ်အစွဲ (talk) 01:00, January 30, 2016 (UTC)

Workshop review
Thanks for the review! I liked what you siggested about the convo between Cyrus and the figure (I like how you referred to him as the Father, that was one of the names I had in mind for him) and I I will certainly change the dialogue. I got one more finished pasta that has been reviewed but I'd like another opinion on it: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:522146#2

Thanks for your help it is greatly appreciated.

User:DarthWeezer1994 18:05, January 30, 2016 (UTC)

RE:
Hiya!

Indeed, it seems like it's no more than a misunderstanding on the mechanics of the Writer's Workshop, so there will be no penalties for that person. However the post has been dealt with.

I'm doing great! Everything is excellent and I'm satisfied with my life. My avatar is from a fancomic based on the Undertale videogame, yep. It's a great game and one of my favorites of last year, and since I had the same avatar for months I thought it was time for a change.

Feel free to pester me anytime. To be completely honest, I'm not really a social person, and I'm way more used for people to propose a topic to talk about than me starting a conversations, so yep,

RE:
Yeah, Undertale is certainly unique! It has shown to be a very worthwhile game, although the first area may drag a bit because it's different than the rest of the game in terms of enemy encounter chance (after the first area there are less random encounters), but after that the game certainly improves significantly. I found the writing style charming and pretty funny in many sections, so I think you would enjoy it.

Stellaris, eh? I never heard about it. It should be worth keeping an eye on, I suppose! I just hope it won't be very expensive once it's out, my budget for games isn't exactly high.

I don't have social anxiety but I do too find much easier to use a computer to talk, supposing I'm not the one to start a conversation. Once it gets going I do feel more comfortable, though, although at times I feel a bit...worried I may be a hassle to talk with, heh --&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 00:13, January 31, 2016 (UTC)

Slow burn, eh? For some reason that's a term I hear more and more the recent days, although they are more in a literary context. From what I have heard of it, it's possible my style does kind of fit 'slow burn', although that's more due to my...flaws as a writer. Beginnings are very difficult! Short stories, by example creepypastas, don't seem to have this kind of problem, but my multi-chapter novels/fanfiction unfortunately seem to fall in that problem, at least in my personal opinion.

$60? Ouch. I'll definitely have to wait for a sale, that's far beyond my budget. I suppose the wait will be worth it, though.

Heh, yeah! More time for thinking is good. Videogames are always a nice conversation topic, although...in terms of videogames I tend to lean a lot towards certain genres. RPGs, Visual Novels, games of the mystery/crime genre...those are my favorite ones. I don't know if you share such tastes, though!

After all the impression I have of AAA games is that they don't usually share my tastes, which is a shame and a relief at the same time, mostly because that means the games I usually play aren't so expensive. --&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 01:24, January 31, 2016 (UTC)

The Dead Eyed Dog
Thanks for leaving feedback on my draft! I don't know if you saw, but I left another message on the new B:TAS thread. By the way, I saw you've changed your profile pic again. Raidra (talk) 00:42, February 2, 2016 (UTC)
 * I'll have to talk more later because I'm not feeling so great right now, but your comment about Batman staying so calm reminded me of a Far Side cartoon. This woman was driving along and thinking something to the effect of, "There's no need to panic... I'm just going to pull over calmly and let the bee out of the car..."  The thing that made it The Far Side was the bee was human-sized and sitting in the backseat.  That cartoon is probably pinned on Bruce Wayne's wall somewhere as inspiration. Raidra (talk) 00:10, February 3, 2016 (UTC)

I'm feeling better, thanks. :-) Like you say, it wasn't my thing, but I can appreciate what they tried to do. A lot of fiction today is boring because so many people just do clones of more successful stories.  Frank Miller is talented, but that doesn't mean everyone should write like Frank Miller.  Earlier I remembered a powerful moment from Batman Beyond- the scene showing Bane's condition after years of Venom abuse.

Here's an idea for a website- Old Superheroes Telling Jokes! I can imagine a lot of posters for The Gray Ghost, The Shadow, and Sherlock Holmes in the Bat Cave too. Shoot, he may have those pictures on his bedroom mirror to get himself psyched up in the morning. In any case, here's a storyline I just envisioned. A threatening-looking villain infiltrates the Bat Cave. Batman responds with a calm, "Hello, there. Take one more step and there'll be trouble." The villain responds, "Man, it's no fun if you're not going to freak out! Forget this; I'm going home!" That storyline is a whole lot better than Commissioner Gordon with a Mohawk.

Gary Larson had a lot of horror spoofs. There was one cartoon in which Igor was being berated by Dr. Frankenstein, who was holding a Frankenstein's monster head about one-fourth normal size. The story was that Igor had forgotten to check his pockets, and as a result, the monster's head had gone through the wash and shrunken in the dryer. Raidra (talk) 01:19, February 4, 2016 (UTC)
 * Someone told me my story "Most Sinister Weapon" was an odd piece, but a good one and I replied, "Thanks! I'd much rather have my work called odd, but good, than to have people say, 'Oh, we've seen this dreck a million times! BOO!'" I remember that episode.  I had forgotten about the end, but you're right.  That was a good one.


 * ~laughs~ When you work for Dr. Frankenstein, there are rough consequences if you screw up!  Can't you just imagine one of Igor's friends sitting at a sidewalk cafe, seeing this monster with Igor's head coming down the road, and saying, "Oh, so you got that promotion after all!  Good for you!" Raidra (talk) 01:16, February 5, 2016 (UTC)

No, I haven't seen those, though I've seen a commercial for Bad Blood. What irritates me is the commercial doesn't say what the plot is about. It looks interesting, and the fact that it has so much of the Bat Family makes it look promising, but it's not a good sign when they don't share what the plotline is.

I generally like odd things. However, I don't care for things that are odd, but stupid (I'm looking at you, Uncle Grandpa). I'll have to talk more later; my aunt's Yorkie (the shiny eyed dog) is demanding my attention. Raidra (talk) 01:37, February 5, 2016 (UTC)
 * I just read the summary on Wikipedia, and I can understand now- it's one of those where they don't want to spoil anything by giving away too many details.
 * My Aunt the Yorkie- from the same minds that brought you My Mother the Car! ;-) In any case, thanks!  I'll tell her (my aunt; the Yorkie is male) that you said so.  His name is Brady, and everyone talks about what a cutie he is.  Yorkies can be annoying at times, but they really are loving little creatures.  Years ago we had what we think was a bearded collie, and he was very protective of us.  Then again, so's Brady!  As for the swords, those are paper models I made for a project.  I have pictures of the project in various stages.  For instance, this was before I colored the pieces.  That particular photo depicts a few Indian weapons.  They are, from top to bottom, a talwar, a shuckra, a pata, a khanda, and a bhuj.  Brady was sniffing around when I was taking some of the pictures during this stage, so in total there are three pictures of him among paper weapons. Raidra (talk) 04:12, February 6, 2016 (UTC)

Eleen DeGeneres did a routine about My Mother the Car. "My Mother the Car has to be the dumbest show ever made. I'm not saying whoever wrote it was on drugs, but the guy who green-lit it had to have been. 'What's the new show?' 'Well, this guy has a car.  It's his mother, and it talks to him.'  'I love it.  Wow, my hand looks neat.'"  I happened to see the episode of her show in 2008 when she had then-senator Barack Obama read that bit from a book collecting her routines. It was great. I wonder if she had John McCain read anything. That would have been great.

I remember one time, when Brady was just a puppy, my aunt started to go on her morning walk, but forgot something and had to come right back. Brady went to greet her and wanted to get up and lick her, as if to say, "Where were you?! Don't ever leave me again!" He doesn't need weapons either. One time, when we were at my grandmother's house (where my aunt and Brady stay part of the year), I was taking him for a walk in the yard when a couple of bigger dogs came by. They saw him, stopped in their tracks, watched him, and then turned back and went another way. He must have a reputation in those parts! "Don't mess with that guy! He's crazy!"

Thanks! Sometime I'll have to post the pictures of the finished project. Years ago, back when Reggie Bush was with the New Orleans Saints, there was a commercial for something called Fatheads- giant stickers which depict athletes, superheroes, princesses, and whatnot and are used to decorate walls. It opened with a man and Reggie Bush in the man's house. The voice-over noted, "It looks like you're about to express your fanship by taping Reggie Bush to your wall!" In the full version of this commercial, the man started to reach for Reggie. Bush pulled his arm away as if to say, "Don't you touch me!" and told him, "Watch out, man!" The voice-over added, "But did you know there's a way to express your fanship without ruining your wall, or the Saints' chances?" The man looked like, "Huh," like he had no idea there was another option. Raidra (talk) 04:17, February 7, 2016 (UTC)

Re: I gotcha now you dirty plagiarist!
So you're saying you want to plagiarize my way of citing stories that influenced me? (Glares accusingly.) Jokes aside, feel free to do it that way, I always enjoy when people reference what inspires them as it gives me a lot of opportunities to check out works that other users enjoy. That is the proper way to make the page, you can also make it a blog if you want participation. ("I enjoyed ______ too.") If you want to do it that way, I can delete that subpage for you. Your choice on how you want to handle it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 06:25, February 7, 2016 (UTC)


 * No problem, best of luck with writing out the inspirations. Remember that you don't have to do everything all at once, you can take your time with it. Have a good night. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 07:15, February 7, 2016 (UTC)

Re: Of Swords and Jokes
Oddly enough, I was flipping through the channels this morning and one of them was airing My Mother the Car. I hadn't thought about a double meaning for "green-lit", but now that you mention it, I think you're onto something! I don't have any of Ellen's, but I do have a few comedy albums and books, as well as a few comedy movies. Sometimes, when I flip through the channels, I'll come across a good comedy special, like Sweat the Small Stuff by Kevin James, Aloha, Fluffy by Gabriel Iglesias, or the Richard Pryor retrospective I Ain't Dead Yet (I don't like blue comedy, but Richard Pryor had some funny stuff). I once came across a Wanda Sykes routine about another bad TV pitch. She had just gotten a show on Fox (I think it was called Wanda at Large), and she noted, "Before you get to do the kind of show you want to do, you have to turn down a lot of bad shows. There was one, my agent told me, 'You don't even want to hear this.' I told her, 'No, go ahead.'  She told me, 'Well, the idea is you're this family's maid, and you win the lottery, but you just love being their maid so much that you keep on being their maid.'  I said, 'Set up the meeting.  I want to slap that stupid-*** idea right out of their heads'." The audience laughed and she added, "If I won the lottery, I'd walk out in the middle of this joke!"

~laughs at "dog fight club" comment~ Well, that would explain why he likes to take naps in the morning!

I'm thinking about posting the pictures on a blog since there are several of them. I'll let you know when they're posted. There probably were different versions of that commercial. Another part of that commercial (which may or may not have been split into a separate commercial) mentioned "Real-Life Spider-Man." It showed a guy dressed like Spider-Man duct-taped to the wall and frantically pounding the wall to try to get loose. Raidra (talk) 03:29, February 8, 2016 (UTC)


 * Well, I like to think I can be funny, and I like to make humorous and/or witty comments. I think I get it from my parents.  My older brother is the same way.  One time, when we were at his house, my nephew was building with blocks.  He needed a solid surface, so I said, "Wait a minute," went to the CD shelf, and got an compilation album that I knew had the song "We Built This City" by Starship.  When my brother came in I pointed out the album and noted, "We built this city on rock and roll."  He replied, "That must be one of those cities that can only be seen from a starship."  I won't be releasing any comedy albums anytime soon, but there's humor in a lot of my writing.  I'll have to share some more later.


 * Roger Ebert once quoted a George Carlin line in a review- "How does cocaine make you feel? It makes you feel like having more cocaine!"  Ebert had three books compiling reviews for bad movies: I Hated, Hated, Hated This Movie, Your Movie Sucks, and A Horrible Experience of Unbearable Length: More Movies That Suck.  He also had Ebert's Little Movie Glossary, later expanded into Ebert's Bigger Little Movie Glossary, which compiled Hollywood cliches.  I may not always agree with his comments, and there's some occasional strong language, but those books are comedy gold.  One of my favorites was the one for Resident Evil.  He cracks that in slasher films, knives make slashing sounds just from moving through the air, and in the future, doors make loud metallic crashing sounds without even moving.  He also notes a scene in which a character is surprised that blood on the floor is coagulating, claiming, "It doesn't do that until you're dead!"  Ebert asked, "How does the blood on the floor know you're dead?"  Here are a few more comments. http://www.rogerebert.com/rogers-journal/eberts-most-hated Raidra (talk) 02:23, February 9, 2016 (UTC)

Thanks! :-D You're funny yourself. By the way, I've scanned the pictures into the computer, so I should be ready to post them and create the paper weapons blog soon. The sharing will soon begin!

I don't always agree either (For instance, he didn't like Home Alone 2: Lost in New York and I loved it). There's one thing to be said, though- he said what he thought. It didn't matter if other critics were gushing about a film; if he thought it stunk, he said so. Have you heard about the incident several years ago when Columbia Pictures had a fake movie critic praising their films (http://hoaxes.org/archive/permalink/david_manning)? Oy. In any case, I hope you find plenty of entertaining comments and one-liners. Some time ago I posted a couple more quotes from Ebert on this blog- http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Dorkpool/Stupid_Horror_Characters Raidra (talk) 03:06, February 10, 2016 (UTC)

Collab Pasta?
Hey vroom. School's out again and now comes one of those rare occasions that I have some free time on my hands, so I'd like to ask, would you be in for writing a collab pasta? I haven't written anything in half a year but recently I came across a gross video about a foot dissection. It kinda got me thinking... but at the moment I don't feel confident enough to trust that my own ideas are open enough to write an entire story by myself. So naturally I turn to the author of the hilariously genius Tornado Tango.

Are you willing to accept my offer...? (If so, any ideas?)

Best wishes

Rinskuro13 (talk) 22:06, February 8, 2016 (UTC)

New story
Hey, since you reviewed and liked two of my stories I thought I'd let you know that I am working on one that will be done soon, and when I complete it, I would like some feedback. Also, if you have anything in the Writer's Workshop that needs review, I'd be happy to return the favor.

User:DarthWeezer1994 09:45, February 9, 2016 (UTC)

Re:Reply
Don't sweat it. But yeah I'll drop ya a line when my story is posted to the Workshop. I saw your Corruption of Youth story on the Workshop after I messaged you so I figured I'd look at it. After all, you helped me get two of my pastas out of the womb, so I figured I'd give back. I actually plan to be a little more active on the Workshop, at any rate. Kinda do my part for the community.

User:DarthWeezer1994 04:39, February 10, 2016 (UTC)


 * That's odd, 'fungus' isn't a filtered word. I made the thread for you, try posting it there. If it won't take, pastebin a copy to me. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:52, February 10, 2016 (UTC)


 * No problem, it happened about a year ago to someone else and prevented them from posting. (Not sure why it redirected there though.) EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:03, February 11, 2016 (UTC)


 * I posted the story for them but I believe the issue resolved itself by their next post. The wiki's been wonky lately and assigning a specific admin to the automated talk page messaging system for a few months now. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:09, February 11, 2016 (UTC)


 * I never trusted that automated abomination... Hopefully it is just a random occurrence that happens only in a blue moon. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:22, February 11, 2016 (UTC)

Raidra Comedy Jam, part one
I heard that the remake was misleading because it was more of a "midquel" or a sequel than a remake. Eh, let's just call it part of a reboot and call it good.

Hey, if you're going to kill people in a work of fiction, make sure they die in creative, interesting, and/or amusing ways! Before I do the blog, I thought I'd share some of my comedy. Like the previous two I shared (the one about prescription drug side-effects and the one about the breaking wind contest), these were written a few years ago. I hope you enjoy!

The Butterfly Effect

I’m into classic movies because most of today’s movies are lousy. They make Cool as Ice [Possibly the best bad movie ever] look like The Godfather. There was a movie a few years ago called The Butterfly Effect. It had Ashton Kutcher in it, so it was touted as “Ashton Kucher’s serious movie”. I think that’s the only way they touted it. “Ashton Kucher’s serious movie!” Whether that strategy served them well is anyone’s guess. Anyway, I read the review in the paper when it came out, and I don’t think the reviewer knew much about the movie. First off, he said, “The title comes from a belief that if a butterfly flaps its wings, it can cause disasters on the other side of the world”. I thought, “Don’t give me that! The title comes from Ray Bradbury’s ‘A Sound of Thunder’ and you know it!” For those of you who weren’t in my 9th grade English class, that was a story where this guy goes back in time to hunt a dinosaur [SPOILER ALERT], and when he comes back the whole world is messed up because he accidentally stepped on and killed a butterfly that was fated to be eaten by some other creature. [END SPOILER ALERT] How many Bradbury fans use that as an excuse for things? “No, I have to get the last slice of pepperoni pizza! Who knows what catastrophe could happen if I don’t get it?!”

The second thing in the review I thought was weird was, “Ashton Kucher’s character in the movie has post-traumatic stress disorder which allows him to travel through time.” Now, I have post-traumatic stress disorder, so I’m reading this thinking, “I’ve never been able to travel through time.”  Then I start wondering, “Why me? Four percent of this country’s population has post-traumatic stress disorder. Why do I have to be the one with a defective case? Where can I exchange it for one that works right?”

Outtakes

I generally don’t like TV today either. Just because I got addicted to TV doesn’t mean I like it. Yes, you heard that right. Anyway, they show all these shows, and then they put them out on DVD. I think it’s interesting when they have DVDs of shows nobody cared about the first time around. “Now available on DVD, Point Pleasant!” “Point Pleasant!?!? Oh boy!!!” [My apologies if you liked Point Pleasant]

They have the DVD sets for sitcoms like Friends, offering things like outtakes and deleted scenes. I don’t care about that. There are two shows I’d like to see outtakes from. The first is Extreme Makeover. For instance, did they ever drop a nose on the floor, or put someone’s lips on upside-down, or something like that? Those shows are crazy. I don’t like those shows. I like the shows talking about plastic surgery horror stories. I know that sounds sadistic, but I’m not watching because I’m sadistic. I want to see the other side, because you know not every surgery is going to be flawless. Getting serious for a moment, I’ve seen parts of these two shows on The Learning Channel. The first one was Facelifts From Hell and the other was You Ruined My Looks. The nice thing with titles like that is you get an idea of what you’re about to see. Unless there’s something very wrong with you, you’re not going to see the opening sequence and think, “Hey, this looks like it’ll be a delightful program! I think I’ll order a deli tray, invite some friends over!” On the second one there was a case – and I am not making this up. You may have seen this one when it was on Montel – where this guy wanted surgery on his pectoral muscles. The doctor operated using a cake slicer, and gave him size B female breasts. What kind of sadistic person does something like that!? The doctor was on the lam for a while, but they caught him, which is good. Anytime someone uses equipment from The Pampered Chef during a surgery, something is very wrong. I’ll say one last thing about plastic surgery. Why is it that when everyday people went on shows like Extreme Makeover and The Swan and got all cut up it was okay, but when a celebrity has a little something done it’s like, “Oh!” (looks horrified).

The other show I’d like to see outtakes from is Antiques Roadshow. I can just imagine the following situation: “Yeah, I have this Milk and Honey album autographed by John Lennon, and I thought it’d be worth a lot.” “Yes, well, the thing I noticed first was that this album didn’t come out until 1984. John Lennon, unfortunately, was assassinated in 1980, so my conclusion is that either you’re trying to pull a fast one, or you’ve had a fast one pulled on you.”

Stupid Moments of the Week

Speaking of contests [This was after the "Breaking Wind Contest" bit], I heard of a stupid moment from American Idol. David Archuleta was performing “Stand By Me”, and he was doing all right until he suddenly broke into “Beautiful Girls” by Sean Kingston. “You’re way too beautiful, girl…” I thought, “What was that all about!?” and so did the American Idol people because they now had to pay royalties for two songs instead of one. I later found out that “Beautiful Girls” samples “Stand By Me”, so it’s not totally random. Still, you wouldn’t be listening to someone singing “Under Pressure” and expect them to break out with, “All right, stop! Collaborate and listen!/Ice is back with a brand new invention!” [Some act on either The X-Factor or Britain's Got Talent later proved me wrong] I do think it would be funny, though, if people just randomly broke into “Beautiful Girls” while singing other songs. “My baloney has a first name/It’s O-S-C-A-R/My baloney has a second name/You’re way too beautiful, girl…”

That was one of my stupidest moments of the week for that week. The other one was when I was reading a summary for the classic Bugs Bunny cartoon “Baseball Bugs”. That’s the cartoon in which Bugs had to play an entire team of cheating thugs all by himself. At the end of the game, Bugs is pitching again and one of the players actually chops down a huge tree and uses the trunk as a bat. Whoever wrote the article helpfully noted, “In reality, a bat that size is against the rules.” Really? You really feel the need to tell people that you can’t use an enormous tree for a bat? If someone’s using a tree as a bat, then never mind the bat rule, you need to give them a drug test because something’s just not right! Raidra (talk) 00:52, February 11, 2016 (UTC)


 * A reboot of one of the original films, or a reboot of the semi-remake? Ow, my head hurts!


 * To quote Bugs Bunny, "Ah, my public! How they love me!"  Seriously, though, thanks!  I'm glad you liked it! :-D I love self-deprecating humor too.  That's why I like David Letterman and the late Jimmy Durante.  I like a lot of observational, slice-of-life humor too.  Jay Leno was never my favorite, but I have all three of his Headlines books as well as a book called Jay Leno's Police Blotter.  The "Headlines" segment involved him taking an odd headline, piece of text, advertisement, or picture from a so-called serious newspaper and joking about it (or just showing it and letting it speak for itself).  One of my favorites from one of the headlines books talked about a brain that was found in a jar in an apartment (I think it had been stolen from a medical center).  The article noted that the brain was taken to a nearby hospital, where it was pronounced dead.  Leno cracked, "Of course the brain was dead!  Everyone knows you have to poke holes in the top of the jar!"  My favorite from the police blotter book read, "Offensive snowman, such-and-such block of such-and-such street.  Officers corrected problem."  Letterman had a similar segment called "Small Town News".  Occasionally they'd have an entry from a city that wasn't a small town, but was too good to pass up.  One time Dave jokingly explained, "This comes from the Detroit Free Press from the small town of Detroit, Michigan.  It's so small it's really more of a hamlet than an actual town."  I'll have to post some more routines soon, but tonight I'll work on getting my blog ready to post.  Hopefully I'll have everything ready tomorrow. Raidra (talk) 00:40, February 12, 2016 (UTC)

~laughs~ Can't you just imagine hearing gunshots and seeing police officers firing at a snowman? That skeleton story was funny too. Here's the blog- http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Raidra/My_Paper_Weapons,_Part_One. I've decided to have it in three parts. I hope it's worth the wait! Raidra (talk) 00:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)
 * I've left a response to your comment on the blog, which now has a link to the second part. :-D Raidra (talk) 00:18, February 14, 2016 (UTC)

I'd appreciate it if you'd report the story, or at least tell them to give me credit. Wow, that ticks me off! >:-[ At least people on here know who the real author of that story is.

In more positive news, the third and final part of the paper weapons blog is up. Also, here's another skeleton naming story. Years ago there was a detective show called Barnaby Jones (I'm pretty sure it starred Buddy Ebsen, who played Jed Clampett on The Beverly Hillbillies). Mom told me that at the junior high school (where she taught) they named the skeleton "Barnaby Bones." Raidra (talk) 00:17, February 15, 2016 (UTC)

Long Time No See!
How long has it been since we last talked again? It's been awhile. Anyway, I was thinking about how I'm going to end my Haunting Hour pasta. I have two possible endings. I showed them to Raidra and she said she liked both of them. Here are the endings:

Alternate Ending 1:



Towards the end of the episode, the protagonist starts to think about what has happened all day. When this happens, she catches onto a pattern. The samurai only seems to appear when the DVD isn't playing. However, when the DVD is playing, she is protected from the samurai within her room. The protagonist decides to test out the pattern by opening her door and pausing the DVD. She waits a few moments until the samurai appears across the hall. She repeats the process except with the DVD playing and the samurai doesn't show up. She also concludes that, based on the brick incident, the closest the samurai can get to entering her room is by forcing objects through random entry points like a window when powerful enough. While the DVD is playing, she takes a moment to get a drink. However, the episode ends sooner than she expected as she sees the samurai running after her. She drops the drink and starts sprinting out the door. She heads towards the lake and swims as fast as she can until she passes out from exhaustion. She later wakes up in the hospital where Erika asks her why she jumped in the lake. The protagonist tells her that the samurai started running after her and that thought that she could swim to the other side successfully seeing as how the distance didn't seem that far. The protagonist also tells Erika that the samurai from earlier was chasing her. Erika shows concern for her and tells the protagonist that she found a DVD from her collection in the protagonist's room while gathering some of her belongings. The protagonist immediately asks if its the DVD for The Haunting Hour. Erika gets a confused look on her face and loudly says "What?" and tells the protagonist that she hasn't heard of the show, let alone own a DVD for the series.



Alternate Ending 2:



As the episode is coming to an end, the protagonist notices something odd. When one of the characters in the episode mentions a samurai, the camera cuts to an empty space where the samurai should be. The protagonist scratches their head at first but suddenly gasps when she makes the shocking conclusion that the samurai from the episode might be the samurai that was following her throughout the house. She denies this at first but soon puts the dots together and finds out that she's unfortunately correct. After the credits roll, the DVD goes back to the main menu. When this happens, the protagonist goes to find a hiding spot. As she is doing this, she sees blue specs glimmering that are following the samurai. The samurai then peels off of the wall and becomes a fully three dimensional being. The protagonist tries to flee but gets caught by the samurai who restrains her. She tries hard to fight back but she seems to have no luck. The samurai eventually loosens their grip by mistake and the protagonist is able to escape. She runs out of the house and quickly ran towards the end of the street. When she gets there, she sees a car coming towards her but before she could get out of the way, she is hit and immediately wakes up in her bed screaming while sweat is pouring down her face.

So which ending looks appealing to you?

 Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   01:52, February 13, 2016 (UTC)

FO: IV
Super late to be talking about this, but time (and money) really aren't on my side so please forgive me on those fronts. I did get FO:IV a while after Xmas, but didn't have much time to play it. Months later, I still feel like I should talk about it. Thanks for the recommendations for Fallout IV (A game you've likely already mastered since your previous message). I'm enjoying it so far. If I'm going to be honest, it does feel like a step away from the series due to its interactions, dialogue, and gameplay changes. I like the fact that it's challenging (playing on survival level), but I feel like it's a step away from the original series (Mainly in dialogue options). I'm a few days away from completing it, but I'm having a good time with it so thanks for the review/recommendation. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:47, February 13, 2016 (UTC)


 * Yeah, New Vegas felt more like the original series with its humor and gameplay. The voiced protagonist was a bit of a stumbling block for me (especially with the dialogue options.) too as it really felt like you were limited with what you could say. I enjoyed Skyrim so I'll probably check out Elder Scrolls (likely months after its release), but Fallout is more my series even with the newest changes. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:53, February 13, 2016 (UTC)


 * I'll probably just wait for everything to come out and for Bethesda to work out any bugs. (I also have a couple other games I wanna play through as well.) I really don't trust getting a season pass, especially on games that are notorious for glitches. (I haven't completed a number of quests due to them being glitched out and not recognizing when a quest has begun. Thanks for the heads-up on the DLCs though. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:01, February 17, 2016 (UTC)


 * Yeah, there are a lot of rants to be had about video games currently (gazes wistfully at the pachenko machine where Silent Hills once stood.) so best not to open that industrial-sized can of worms. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:26, February 17, 2016 (UTC)

Geist on Trial
So sorry, one last surprise mock exam. It's the holidays now so I'll be as free as a libertus.

I know in the game Ace Attorney (basically lawyer mortal kombat) a ghost goes on trial and it ends up being pretty freaky. But that being said, though I played a Japanese lawyer game before, law isn't my area of expertise. I made a last minute switch from considering law to medical school instead so unless you know a fair bit about the courtroom it'd be too easy to make a technical slip up.

Dunno, it's really up to you if we go down this route, as my knowledge on the judicial system ain't so sharp anymore. Are you a lawyer?

Obviously veering on the medical side may make things easier for me in terms of technicality. Maybe thinking something gross like a foot dissection...ughhh...that would make for good description! Something like that. Just can't think of a suitable plotline. Any ideas along that line would be great... or if you'd like to do something psychological instead of gory I'd support it too.

Sorry, I don't mean to be rude or say your idea wasn't good. It's just that practicality wise law is a pretty complicated matter we'd need to do tons of research to get right. It'd be pretty hard for me, at least.

How are your stories for Valentine's day going? Gonna dedicate one to a special someone, or staying a single pringle?

Rinskuro13 (talk) 11:40, February 13, 2016 (UTC)

Ps. Do you have skype?

Reply to "The Better Ending" message
The more I think about it, the more appealing the first ending seems to be to me. I don't know how overused the nightmare ending is but I'm not going to risk going with that ending if my goal is to make this pasta as fresh as possible.

I added a new chapter to the story, though I'm not sure if you read chapter 10 of the story since it ties into this new chapter. To refresh your memory, here's chapter 10 along with the unfinished chapter:

"Chapter 10

After that scene played out, I noticed that my room became dimmer. I turned around to see that the sun was starting to set as it turned my room orange. While this seemed beautiful to look at, my breathing became faster as I slowly walked over to the shattered window to shut the blinds. When I was a kid, my mom would tell me to close my blinds at night so that way, people would be less inclined to look into my window or break in or something like that. Ever since then, I have NEVER left my blinds open at night. Even during sunset, I still closed them anyway.

As soon as the blinds were shut, I went back to the daybed and grabbed the remote. Just as I was about to hit play, I heard some low rumbling sounds that seemed like there was a thunderstorm coming from the basement. At that moment, every part of my body had stiffened tightly and I took in a small gulp. I then got up and grabbed the blanket that was covering up the bird and broken glass. I headed down the stairs and opened up the basement door.

When I put my foot on the first brown wooden step, I noticed that it gave off a creaking sound and it seemed as though the step was hollow and ready to give way if I'd put too much weight on it. Nevertheless, I continued down the stairs into the basement where I turned on the light as soon as I made it to the bottom.

Much to my surprise, I couldn't hear the rumbling anymore and brushed it off as a really loud motorcycle passing by the end of our short street. Just to be safe, I had checked both the washing machine and dryer to make sure that they weren't left on by Erika or Hunter by mistake. Aside from the abundant amount of loose change I found in the back of both machines, nothing had really seemed out of place.

As I was inspecting the basement further, I once again saw the shadow figure but this time, it was gliding on a wall that was just inches away from me. It also seemed to be carrying a thin rectangular blade with a diagonally cut tip on the right side of its waist. I hollered so loudly, that I almost broke the glass of the basement windows. I then threw the blanket with the dead bird inside it at the figure but when the blanket hit the wall, the shadow figure had disappeared.

At that point, I ran out of the basement so fast that I didn't even bother bringing the blanket upstairs with me. I headed for the kitchen counter and tried using the prepaid phone once again, only this time, I tried contacting Hunter. However, a woman's voice answered the phone and said "We're sorry. But you have insufficient funds to complete this call. To reload your balance, dial..." Before the woman could finish, I angrily screamed "Oh come on!" and threw the phone against the living room wall so hard, that the cheaply made phone had snapped in two.

Chapter 11

After I threw the phone, I began panting slowly and heavily. A few moments later, a sudden jolt had rapidly travelled across my body and at the same time, I had gasped. I ran over to where the phone had landed and I looked over the shattered unit. I noticed that one half of the phone went under the cyan recliner near the couch and the other half was in front of the light brown TV cabinet. I picked up the pieces as quickly as possible, fearing that the shadow figure would show up again, and threw them in the trash. I scampered past the kitchen and travelled up the stairs so fast that I nearly tripped on my way up.

When I got upstairs, I slammed the door and locked it. I even went as far as to put a small white wooden chair that I found in the back corner of the room near the bunk beds under the door handle. I scrambled over to the daybed and tried to hold the remote but my hands were shaking so much that I kept dropping it. I did the best I could to steady my hands and I was eventually able to hit the play button.

The episode had shifted to a scene where the police were investigating Kristy's house. Several officers were shown to be thoroughly examining the kitchen for potential clues to lead them to whoever or whatever caused the damage."

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   06:15, February 14, 2016 (UTC)

Reply to "Some Tropes" message
Oh I see. I thought you're referring to Creepypastas only when you said it's an overdone twist. My bad! I don't know what will happen after the last line in chapter 11.

Heeere's Hailey!  Wanna Talk?   07:48, February 14, 2016 (UTC)

New Story
I got a new story in the Wrter's Workshop that really need looked at. It's a little long, so take your time. But any feedback would be appreciated.

Thanks,

User:DarthWeezer1994 22:07, February 14, 2016 (UTC)

I've actually been less than motivated to write recently, but anytime I have had an idea, I've written them down. So far i have about 20 stories already planned out, i just have to sit down and write them, which is easy once I've planned it out. And wow, honestly your message gave me some inspiration, and the fact that i've been randomly finding my stories narrated on youtube. I think thats what i needed to see and hear because i have been really down about my writing not really getting any traffic. So I'm happy you messaged me, and I have an idea for The Raffle that i'm currently working out. I think you'd like it. I'm glad i could motivate someone out there, and I definitely want to read some of your new material. I've said this a thousand times on here already, but I'm definitely going to write a few short stories tonight, and if i think they're up to par, you'll probably see them later tomorrow or wednesday. I hope all is well with you, and i'm going to stalk your page now for stories, lol. GreyOwl (talk) 00:25, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

Credit
I thought I'd start a new thread. I may post some more comedy or thoughts on B:TAS soon, so this one may not last long.

I would appreciate that, thanks. The biggest problem seems to be with this user- https://www.wattpad.com/story/50451000-what-lurks-in-the-darkness/parts. This one has four of my stories- “What Was Sacrificed”, “The Binding Mask” (misspelled as “The Blinding Mask”, which is an understandable mistake), “Fu Manchu’s Serum”, and “Dawn’s Notebooks”. It steams me that people taking stories from here and passing them off like they’re responsible for them. If these people had approached me and said, “I love your story, and I’d like to share it,” I would have been honored and told them, “As long as you give me credit and don’t make changes, sure!”

The good news is I found a couple websites in which my stories had been shared with credit. Someone called Lavel W. Nhuza translated “The Binding Mask” and posted it on the Spanish language Creepypasta (http://es.creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/The_binding_Mask), and someone called Midnight Siren posted a reading of “The Melon Head Illustration” on YouTube (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kkWVKtnbpd8). I was tickled pink. I've thanked Nhuza already, and I left a message on Shadowswimmer77's "Wattpad Plagiarism" blog saying I'd appreciate if someone thanked Midnight Siren on my behalf.

I once saw a Saturday Night Live segment in which Mike Meyers played a boy talking about how he and his father had gone on vacation. Apparently the father had gotten into trouble at the casino. "He shouted, 'Give me more credit! I need more credit!'  So I told him, 'Okay!  You're a terrific daddy, and I'm having a wonderful time!'" Raidra (talk) 01:02, February 16, 2016 (UTC)
 * Correction- A different Wattpad user posted "Dawn's Notebooks". Raidra (talk) 01:03, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

That sounds good to me! I would like you to archive it, thank you, but I'm doing it next time. I can't rely on you for everything, right? ;-)

Yeah, when I saw those two sites, I was awed and amazed. :-0 :-) :-D It is a great feeling.

I'm about to call it a night as far as computer time goes, but next time I'll tell you about the B:TAS puzzle and activity computer game I got. Raidra (talk) 01:33, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

hello its me Dark tails doll thanks for your generuse comment? and also yes you can put  my narrations of 'Closet Monster' on the Creepypasta Wiki? Good tails doll (talk) 02:22, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

Yes, that's exactly my problem honestly. I love writing, it's definitely my biggest passion, but I also want other people to love reading what i put all of my effort into. Basically, i like to share my love with other people. And i agree, i wish there was an indicator that could tell how many people read your work, I'm not too fixated on comments, i just really want people to read it because thats what all writers want or else we would just keep it all in our heads.

But wow I'm happy for you. Congrats, I'm going to read it right now. I just finished up a story and i might post it tonight. Yeah i didn't know i got a nomination. I really need to start paying attention, lol. But thank you for letting me know, and thank you for the inspiration. I wouldn't have written today if not for seeing your message. GreyOwl (talk) 03:19, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

Thats amazing, I'm happy with just a nomination honestly. It doesn't matter if i win. But you weren't bragging at all. I'm happy you won one. Honestly. You deserved it. I love when people that have put a lot of work into anything win. GreyOwl (talk) 04:57, February 16, 2016 (UTC)


 * Done. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 07:30, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

Re
Talking of potential pastas I did have one in mind about an obese girl who turns anorexic and ends up starving herself insane and eating her bullies. Bit like Jeff the Killer but 'Mean Girls' version lol. But I doubt you had anything crazy like that in mind.

Anyway, I really liked the alien/demon dissection idea. It's great, and I've decided it's the one we should do. But with the 'misunderstanding' I don't know how we're going to portray that - can they communicate with us... is it one way communication only? Otherwise the scientists will be able to let them know that it's hurting.

We'll name it after we've discussed the plot but for now I've written a passage that could go in the pasta (we're aiming for ham-and-jam-sandwich level gross here). Check it out (careful, it may be icky)-

[Mike swallowed, watching the nurse sterilize the area in apprehension and discomfort. It was cone-shaped, wider at the end, and seemed to curve the wrong way like a finger, or an elephant's trunk. Why the hell evolution had lead to that he had no idea; perhaps the ladies of the species had even stranger bits down there to accommodate. Unfortunately, he'd figured out by now that experience wouldn't help him much; now even he, the world-renowned biomedical researcher, felt the dread of a sweaty first year medical student, scalpel constantly slipping through his gloves.

He took a step forward and brandished his weapon. As the sharp end severed the flesh, translucent green liquid oozed out, and the thing roared explosively, shaking the operating table like a tank with one tread stuck. All of a sudden the horrific smell began to surface as if a stink bomb had been detonated. The others began to cough and splutter, and Mike quickly sieged the drooling opening with a sterilized cloth, trying to keep his lunch in his stomach. He wondered what on earth he would tell his wife in the evening.]

If you haven't figured out by now, it's a dick dissection - how do you like it? (kay im sorry admit i just wanted to do something dirty) The war-related imagery is there on purpose, to suggest an eventual conflict between the two species ;-D That's prolepsis for ya. Perhaps it may need an NSFW tag if we ever put this in the story XD

Rinskuro13 (talk) 15:52, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

PS Yeah Humboldt's right, you really need Skype. We can't have bits of pasta lingering around on our talk pages too much ahaha No pressure tho

Re penis
Thanks! Haha now you mention it I can just imagine fat kids threatening bullies on the playground with it like "don't tease me or I might end up eating you..."

Anyway as for the communication idea I think the fact that the alien/demon understands but refuses to listen seems quite forced... if you catch my drift; basically implementing it without it seeming like a vehicle for gore and blood may be difficult, but we'll see. I have an idea involving more penis so we can see which one works better. ;-))))

I may not discuss it here in case it spoils things for some peeping Tom snooping around your talk page but all will be revealed when you get Skype. Don't worry it's fairly easy to download. Takes no more than a few minutes and is extremely versatile. What may be difficult is syncing up our time zones!

Rinskuro13 (talk) 20:12, February 16, 2016 (UTC)

Ps when you say you live in a place south of me, does that mean you live in Antarctica? If so, Skype syncs may involve late nights as I live in UK.

B:TAS game
Cool! Thanks for the archiving!

The game is called Batman Activity Center and was made by Gryphon Software. I used to enjoy playing it, but when I've tried to play it recently there have been glitches. They're not hilarious glitches, either- they're simply things not moving, appearing, or working. I don't know if it's a problem with the file (like it somehow became corrupted) or my computer.

In any case, it's based on B:TAS, and it sounds like they use the same voice actors. It's a simple game, but I always liked it. The premise is The Joker and Harley Quinn have broken the villains out of Arkham, and you have to help Batman gather clues to find them. Each time you complete a task, you get a clue. Then you use the Batcomputer to decipher the clues so you can find and apprehend the rogues. For instance, you might find a fish and be told, "So-and-so was spotted at the Aquarium." Then you can click on the dot on the map and see Batman swoop down and apprehend whoever it is (Poison Ivy is repeatedly kissing a Venus flytrap when she's caught. Seriously, she's just standing around smooching a little flytrap). There are three areas.


 * The Batcave, presided over by Robin, where you complete tasks such as helping pour colored chemicals in the right order to make a Joker venom antidote and doing simple math problems
 * Gotham City, presided over by Batman (though you hear The Joker and Two-face laughing a lot), where you complete tasks such as guiding Bats through the sewers, navigating a path for chasing Mr. Freeze, playing Concentration (that game where you use memory and trial-and-error try to match cards that are lying face down) against The Joker, and playing a jewelry matching game against Two-Face
 * Wayne Manor, presided over by Alfred, where you complete puzzles and color paintings

There are three levels of difficulty and you can switch between them any time you want. The Help button has Alfred. When you press it Alfred clears his throat, and then when you click on something he provides an explanation. Depending where you are you either get heckling from The Joker or Two-Face or encouragement from Robin or Alfred. When it came to the art, there were a couple times I thought Alfred was a little too patronizing. Maybe that's why he tried to gas the android- he was tired from trying to think up patronizing remarks. ;-) Raidra (talk) 01:49, February 17, 2016 (UTC)
 * Also, thanks and good night to you as well. Raidra (talk) 01:50, February 17, 2016 (UTC)

Like I just told Azu, I know what it's like to be tired or distracted, so I'll understand if you take some time to respond to a post. Hmm, you're probably right about the operating system being older. There are other old games that don't want to run properly, or at all. I liked the Carmen San Diego books and shows, but I didn't like the computer game I had when I was nine or so. That's because I wasn't good at it, though.

I agree completely- Batman games should have brain puzzles too. Batman isn't some unthinking thug breaking doors with his head and spraying bullets (and shouldn't be portrayed as such). There's a game show called Idiotest which has good brainteasers. Someone should have challenges like that in a Batman video game. One of the things Alfred says when you're coloring the paintings is, "My word... what creative use of light and shadow!" That's the one that made me think, "Okay, now you're just looking for nice things to say." The Joker heckling you is great. One of the lines is him shushing somebody and announcing, "Quiet, everyone! Our friend here is trying to concentrate!  But he's not having much luck! (laughs hysterically)"  When you win he says things like, "No fair!" and "I don't like this game anymore!" The interesting thing about the game against Two-Face is the turns are decided by him flipping his coin, meaning one of you could have 3-4 turns in a row. When the bad side shows he shouts, "Ha! My turn!" and when the good side shows he growls, "Ah, take your turn already!"

I've been fascinated with Venus flytraps since I was little. Sometimes I get one and set it outside in the front garden so it can get ants and gnats. One time, before I learned to set them outside, I accidentally killed one. I didn't know it needed to catch live prey, so I tried to feed it a small chunk of ham. It couldn't handle the dead meat and perished. :-( One time I had one which only had one living head.  I did emergency surgery, cutting off all the dead heads and hoping the one current head would be enough to sustain it during recovery.  I destroyed my plant to save it and the emergency pruning worked- new heads grew and it survived all summer. :-)  Raidra (talk) 02:35, February 18, 2016 (UTC)
 * Computer upgrades- gradually making things worse and less convenient in order to serve you!
 * I would totally buy that game.
 * Have you tried looking at a plant nursery or gardening store? Here in Ohio you can buy Venus flytraps, and sometimes pitcher plants, from many stores that sell plants and gardening supplies.  In any case, awww!  I don't know of any praying mantis that had more loving care.  I remember a show with a segment about a system for training fish to do tricks.  I could imagine that as part of a Batman game too, but I digress.  The main part had a wand that could have treats inserted into one end, and you rewarded your fish with a treat whenever it did the desired behavior (such as swimming through a hoop).  It showed the fish eagerly eating its treat, and someone dubbed over, "Oh, thank you, thank you! Mmm-nom-nom-nom-nom!"  Next time you feed a praying mantis an injured fly, imagine it saying, "Oh, thank you, thank you! Mmm-nom-nom-nom-nom!"
 * That sounds perfect. I appreciate it. :-D Raidra (talk) 02:00, February 19, 2016 (UTC)
 * You can probably buy them on-line, but just like buying anything on-line, you have to make sure they're trustworthy.
 * Yeah, my flytraps always end up dying once winter comes. :-( At least a praying mantis can find food and shelter. "Lord, bless this food, and bless the one who fed and sheltered me instead of eating me.  Amen." Raidra (talk) 00:41, February 20, 2016 (UTC)
 * I think they used to offer Venus flytraps for sale in old comic books. No word on what the success rate was, though.
 * Oh, cool! It's an honor, and you're certainly welcome! :-D Yeah, I was disappointed by the low response level too, but it least there's some interest.  The comments were positive, with no trolls saying, "You have to much time on ur hands and you SUCKK!  BOo!!" ;-) If you wait a couple days I plan to make a new blog, one showcasing fantasy weapons wielded by one of my comic book characters.  Some things are touched on in the paper weapons blogs, but others are unique.  Maybe there will be something else you'd be interested in using. Raidra (talk) 01:13, February 21, 2016 (UTC)

Re your website
Alrighty. My account is 'pending approval from administrator' rite nao so hopefully that happens soon. Still feel like you should get skype tho... you'll never experience the wonders if you don't try ;-) Also I had a look around the vroom social network... might stick around for some time. Looks like an interesting place.

Have you watched Tokyo Ghoul or Haikyuu? Been getting back to anime recently.

Rinskuro13 (talk) 12:47, February 21, 2016 (UTC)

Psst, i think its time to archiveeee
 * Hey, did you get my message? I sent it twice but I can't find it in my convos. Goddammit... I'll try it once more. But then again... Skype XD

RE
Thank you so much, Doom Vroom. I really appreciate it. To get stories taken down you have to swear that they are your works and leave an electronic signature, so I guess it is best to report any incidents you see to the author.

This shit with Wattpad is ridiculous. They claim to have a zero tolerance policy regarding plagiarism but it is just rampant. This could cause real problems later if any of us try to get our work published legitimately in anthologies, collections or literary magazines. Sickening.

Well, thanks again, buddy. HumboldtLycanthrope (talk) 17:39, February 21, 2016 (UTC)

Re: Venus Flytraps
I went to Sinclair Community College (in Dayton, Ohio), and there were some art galleries where visiting artists or graduating art students had their works displayed. My last year there was some troll who always left angry, insulting messages in the comment books no matter what the displays were or how brilliant, poignant, entertaining, creative, etc. the art was (I know it was the same person because the manic handwriting was always the same). Sheesh. Some people really need to get lives.

In Naruto there's a sword which is based on a sword from Japanese legend. It's depicted as a katana in the manga and a jian in the anime, and it's been noted that the jian is a more accurate depiction of the weapon described in the myth. One thing I've learned from my reading and research is there's been a lot of cultural exchanges (for good and bad reasons), especially in Asia. In fact, some have speculated that ninjutsu started out as a mix of martial arts and espionage techniques from Japanese, Chinese, and Korean sources. People think of karate as being Japanese, but it originally came from Okinawa, which was originally a separate kingdom (sort of like the United States of America and Hawaii). A mish-mash universe where a kunoichi wields a Chinese sword isn't weird at all in my book. I wonder if anybody is going to come across this section and, not realizing the background, wonder, "What does this have to do with Venus flytraps?" Raidra (talk) 01:08, February 22, 2016 (UTC)

Hey there!
I was wondering if I could ask a favor of you. I recently completed a horror story. It's only four pages long, which is pretty short for me, and I was wondering if you could review it. You've helped me a lot with this kind of thing in the past, and I was hoping you could give some much needed feedback. Here's the link to the page,Thanks so much for all you do man.

SnakeTongue (Nelson Smith) (talk) 05:04, February 22, 2016 (UTC)