Talk:Voice Messages/@comment-10789912-20150925001612

I think I've made an understanding on this story.

The painter, Pickman, saw a strange creature, which he painted. He later saw them disguised as people, which he also painted. (Or the other way around?).

Fifer purchased this painting of the creature, and used it is a sort of therapy on his patients, namely Jacob, and drove him into a homicidal frenzy, where he was easy placed.

Without Fifer's knowledge, these creatures really did exist. There really was a monster, (or several), and we are left to think about if Jacob really was insane, or really did find out about them, or possibly even realized it when he was first shown the painting.

Either-


 * Jacob killed and innocent girl, and will go on a homicidal rampage


 * Jacob really did find a monster, and will rid the world of them, making him the stories hero

Either way, fantastic plot. There were some grammar mistakes-

"he would have already gotten one, if they were the size of a brick" (I believe you meant "weren't the size of a brick").

"and it helped him to not have to face the withdrawals, which he knew were something he didn’t want to do."

"showed the painted to Jacob."

Some awkward phrasing, such as "that last bit was said as an afterthought,". You do not need to add this.

This was a genuinely fun story, that really captured that "campy" feel for me, the feeling I try to invoke when reading Creepypastas.

Creativity- 5

Story- 5

Execution- 5

Creepiness- 3

18/20 (A+, a masterpiece).

The thick pseudo-Lore that was involved, the fact it makes you think of it over and over again, and the fact it really captures what horror is meant to be, is a breath of fresh air in a genre overrun by pollution.

When the next Pasta of the Month timing comes through, remind me. I'm nominating this story.