Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24474804-20140422181424/@comment-10950063-20140423164012

Your pasta isn't getting any reviews because it's a wall of text. People are glad to help, but you have to do the basics on your own. Split it up in paragraphs, make sure you start a new paragraph everytime there's a new speaker.

It's incredibly hard to read as it is now. Fix it and I'll take a look at it.