Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20150912042159/@comment-26193563-20150913223132

Oh my god, where does the closet lead to? (I bet it's the dead.) But I think the cussing is way too unnatural. Most households don't allow children to verbally abuse their guardians (like mine's.) So maybe you could tone it down, make it a landmark moment when Lily yells a cuss word at Sharon? Still a great story, though.