Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20150306110837/@comment-25148755-20150307002410

First off, the ending was amazing. Made me hungry for Mexican.

Mike's inner monologuing was distracting and sounded somewhat wooden, especially in the first paragraph.

Deciding to jog on a path in the woods that is reportedly haunted does not seem to be consistent with the rest of Mike's behavior; he rather seems like the type that would use this as an excuse to not jog. In fact, there's really nothing that telling the reader that  joggers have been mysteriously vanishing adds to the story, other than to make Mike's behavior seem illogical.

I agree with atonal that the chairs are odd. Are they ghost chairs? What is the purpose of them, other than to hold the dead bodies? Or are they ghosts? Gah. Confusion.

Decent description of your headless axeman character, although he did come off as a bit generic (which I suppose is fine once the nature of how this story is being told is revealed.)

Hope it helps!