Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20140627105357/@comment-24381191-20140701115623

CassistRabbit wrote: Although this is a lengthy pasta, it's nevertheless entertaining to read and genuinely unnerving. I could tell that this took place in a post-apocalyptic world, and the journal entries of the protagonist do a good job of describing that. The 'beasts' were interesting creatures- we're never given a full description of them, so it's up to our minds to fill in the blanks, and that helped to make this story a scary one.

The only advice I can give at this point is to try to shorten this pasta if you can, although that's not necessary for the story. You made a handful of errors here and there, but your vocabulary, decsription and pacing are excellent. I would say a quick proofreading is all that's needed to make it into a creepypasta. Thanks for the read, not decribing the beasts properly was sort of on purpose, and I'll proofread this story again for errors and I'll try to shorten it by deleting the unnecessary parts.