Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26901754-20150819155057/@comment-25547916-20150820172650

Well, looking over the story, the format's kinda weird. In particular, the hyphens on the indented passages seem odd, and confused me a bit as sometimes they refer to the captain's thoughts and other times describe dialogue. Another little oddity came in one of the later paragraphs (the one that started with "the codes!") where the captain's thoughts where quotated.

Looking at the story itself, it caught my attention well and held it throughout, but the ending felt a little murky. To be honest, I'm not sure I understand exactly how it ended. Is the reader supposed to know what the darkness is?