Talk:Exhausted/@comment-MrDupin-20160830234607

I don't know if it is an error, but in the last journal entry, the date is 2/8/15, while the other ones are after that.

I liked the weirdness in the piece. I don't recall reading a story about an evil car before. It was something new (at least to me), and that made the story unpredictable. It kept me guessing throughout. Even after finishing the story I'm not entirely sure what happened. I have a couple of theories, and it's good this story made my imagination run wild.

This also had its scary moments too. The oil change with the hair thing made my skin crawl, and the last scene, where Keith sees the car in the fog was also very creepy. I think though that you could have dragged that scene a bit more though. Maybe Keith was having a weird feeling, maybe the weather went chilly, or something along these lines to make the atmosphere more "ominous". We know that something bad is going to happen, you just need to do a bit more to drive the feeling home.

All in all, it was a nice read, even though I'm not particularly fond of journal entries. If you keep this up, you will be producing some top notch stories.