Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25073641-20150418180515/@comment-25763427-20150419174146

"instead of tighten me down to uncomfortability" It should be "Instead of tightening me down to uncomfortability".

"At the ceiling, or at the walls, I can see black paint, staining the white walls and the tall ceiling of my dimly lit room." Remove this part " At the ceiling, or at the walls," it is unessicairy.

The story seems okay. The name is fine. I'm not usre how to make it more scary. Try to give it a better ending, maybe explor what this man sees in the black paint. His mind creating images out of nothing, like that.