Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24694044-20140317192545/@comment-24077689-20140318160558

I am telling you it's not creepy. Take the advice.

Sure your dream might be terrifying, but the way you executed this story was awful. You included no details, you made no attempt at creating suspense, the whole thing was a flop. Your writing wasn't the issue, either, overall your grammar, diction, etc. was on par. But you really have absolutely got to add something more this other than "town full of snakes lol". I mean, there's a point at which you're just insulting the reader's intelligence.