Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29015383-20160714081944/@comment-28266772-20160714152828

The nurse counts down from 10. My mind blacks out before she reaches 5. -> As a general rule you should spell out words below ten.

Other than that I could not identify any mechanical issues. It's a good story that taps into my own personal fear of surgery and anaesthesia so I found it pretty unsettling. I do think the story would benefit from a brief mention of the narrator's still-intact ability to feel things around him. Something like, "I can feel a breeze somewhere on my exposed skin" or something minor that just drives home the extremely morbid fact that this narrator is going to feel their own surgery.

*shudders*

Blech this subject goes through me. But yeah great micropasta! I genuinely enjoyed it and micropastas are super hard to pull off.