Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37296816-20181025074447/@comment-37296816-20181025185342

Appreciate the responses and this is purely fictional.

I wrote this in hopes of getting criticisms in story telling since in my English classes, during a rough draft review, almost no one does their essays or just say my essay has a  "good intro" and a "good thesis" with "great storytelling" when I know that type of criticism is not going to help me.

The type of horror that I was going for was a realistic one. Where the story has the potential of being plausible while disregarding the paranormal and/or monstrous aspects embedded in every other creepypasta I've read.

If it becomes a problem writing towards suicide then I would like to know. Honestly it was one of the first things that came to mind when wanting to write something realistic and horrifying.

Again thank you for providing some resources as well as mentioning my grammar, punctuation, styling, and language use. I sometimes feel unorganized when I don't have a prompt or something to guide me with my writing. This is something I want to break out of and actually develop my writing where it won't need a prompt and hopefully flow freely.

I also didn't mean to bold the whole story; it probably bolded itself when I was writing the author's note.