Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35317694-20180510050548/@comment-9041013-20180510095403

What's up with the journal structure if it doesnt give me any useful information? Your pratagonist takes drugs, feels bad about them and thinks a good idea to take them again? Not the brightest fellow. Anywho, the story is way too short for me to care or feel anything about whats happening? The actual progress happens only at the last paragraph and it doesn't change much because it is miniscule.

Add details, make the story long, make things happen and have him trying different hellucinagenics.

This really has nothing going on for the most part.

Come up with more, like, he takes the drug, these gray creatures do something to him, he takes the drug another time, the creatures do something bigger (they dont have to hurt him physically again and again, try to come up with something that'll scare the pratagonist and thus the readers during these encounters)

Also, you probably have some mechanical issues as well, since I've noticed you wrote "too" where there should be a "to".