Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26694342-20150715012527/@comment-26715482-20150717144139

As Empy stated many of the problems with the story and you asked "so someone else did this story?." What he meant by that is the stories premise has been covered multiple times, making the whole plot cliched in almost every sense of the word. Most gaming creepypastas follow the same format, player buys a game, it's haunted there is typically blood/gore thrown in, ghost/monster comes out of game, and finally the player dies in the end. I suggest you redo this story and make it longer so it's not as rushed, use spell check or have someone proof read it for you, and finally add something speical and unique into the story that every other gaming creepypasta doesn't have.