User blog comment:Rachelrpl67/Stop/@comment-29652084-20170820193528

I'm going to go off the links that Empy gave below as I'm making this comment.

First, User 666 isn't a story. It has no plot. It uses 'babies twisting off heads' for (failing) shock value. It's rambling.

Handshake was just rambling about a Youtube video. There still wasn't a plot. Your writing reflects that of a small child's, and even more so here. It has no natural flow, it has no depth, nothing. You couldn't have possibly even tried here. Also, it's a wall-of-text.

The last. Oh, my god. That last one. You split every small line. It was cliche as hell, had at least 2-3 whole awkward sentences, let alone awkward phrasing, and it was a pitiful attempt to create a story in Second Person narrative. Once again, there wasn't a plot. There wasn't anything there.

I can't even actually say anything about them. I can't give them criticism. There's nothing there to criticize because these aren't stories. They're childish ramblings.