Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150511053919/@comment-25037895-20150512020740

Here's what I advise:


 * 1) Upon the shed’s completion the two went to the old man’s house for dinner
 * 2) The man took a drink of his Root Beer (root beer), it

The storyline is alright in my opinion. I like it, but I think the conclusion is a little "soap opera," like it needs a little elaboration.