Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24713615-20140627010626/@comment-24713615-20140627180859

Sykokillah wrote: This wasn't bad, but near the end it just lost all the hooks that made it so interesting to read. I think you know how to write and you're a good author, just this story isn't that good.

You also made a few typos, I would suggest proofreading it again. I first want to thank you for taking your time to read this and leaving a review. I know that it takes out of your day and I really do appreciate it. Although what you said what short, it picked out all my doubts about the story perfectly. I knew that the ending just didn't feel right to me, it's as if I came back one day and thought ' Eh, might as well finish it somehow.'

I must admit that the ending kind of crafted itself. I know from a writer's point of view that this is not necessary a good thing. Do you have any thoughts on how I could save this story? Would a more mysterious ending prove more effective, or should I completely steer away from going into the house? I wrote this on a whim the other night, after receiving some inspiration from a strange dream, so it can be changed easily. I would be extremely grateful for any furthur thoughts or words.

Thank you again,  and I will  make sure to go through and proofread it.