Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20181220225142/@comment-36393004-20181221015549

He went to the bar because he was trying to avoid the argument that would occur when he told his wife he lost his job. He was trying to build the courage to deal with that ensuing fight. People avoid large arguments like that, trust me I am married and know this. I just gave him a venue in order to contemplate his fate and meet the person who would give him the box. I used the bar because people usually tell their sob stories in bars.

As for him bering a dick, I could see where you would get that vibe without elaborating on his life before the wish was made but to say going to Hell isn't horror is an opinion. For some people that is the worst possible thing that could happen to them and as writers we have to draw from our own fears.

Example: I am an alcoholic and use that aspect of my life in many of my stories as a jumping point, thus the alcohol and bar. I am also religious and fear for my soul, so that is fear for me. I just gave it a physical form in the story instead of my "sins".

I was really trying to not play the whole Jinn or Monkey Paw card by twisting it into something that could damn the users soul. I am sad to see that it fell short for you.