Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20170913043428/@comment-4893169-20170916225902

''Raidra wrote:  It's interesting to see Kes's new pets (which makes sense since she received some as welcoming gifts) and to see her talk about her family (since she was alone in the previous series). Kes having to put up with stupid questions and the mention of Google Earth add elements of realism. As I've mentioned before, talking about WWII childhood fears makes the story more unsettling. Tabitha didn't like Kes pointing out there were arrogant hippies, but I sure did. I'm not condemning all hippies; it's just that I've heard some really arrogant and self-righteous ones. As for the silver toothpick, I've heard of members of the nobility having toothpicks like that. I can imagine Madam Mosley getting one as a sign that's she's made it in the world. I don't have any issues that I can think of (other than the grammatical issues I pointed out). If I think of any other comments, I'll let you know.''

Thank you so much for taking the time to edit this. It was my mom's suggestion that Kes have a family, and not be a hermit-living Mary Sue. This work is also featured on Reddit, and I changed it to hippies from elves to make more believable, also because hippies are kind of like elves--rather anti-establishment, and getting into various mischief.

That's a rather interesting fact about the silver toothpicks. Maybe that would mean Madam Mosley was a descendant of nobility, although of the more healthier bloodline.