Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27612790-20160412000717/@comment-27612790-20160412005947

Derpyspaghetti wrote: This seems like a very unfinished wall of text. Break it up more into more paragraphs. Other than that, good imagery, and decent setup as far as I can tell. Maybe change the title of the pasta, though. It seems blunt and seems almost like it will be a trollpasta. I tried to break it up. There was a line of space between each paragraph when I posted it, and there still is when I go to edit it. Good point about the title, hadn't even thought about that.