Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26447851-20160705140237/@comment-25024572-20160722163018

I actually didn't see the movie; rather, I read the graphic novel it was based on. No idea what the movie's like, so whatever.

As for the stupid guards being a running joke, no. Just...no. If the story were meant as a comedy or parody, ok, sure, that could work. But your story is supposed to be serious(ish), so it doesn't quite work. Also, the running joke is mainly why the story even happens. And why don't the poeople outside lock the door? Hell, why doesn't the door lock from the outside? Considering what the SCP Foundation houses, it'd make some sense if the locks were on the outside, and there were also guards outside. Just saying.

Also, if I remember correctly, the reason why Batman wears a mask isn't to protect his family. His family is dead. He wears it to look like a bat, and strike fear into the hearts of criminals. Now, Spider-Man (with a goddamn hyphen, don't you forget) wears his mask to protect his family, mainly his aunt. For the longest time, he figuresd that his aunt, who is afraid of Spider-Man, would have a heart attack or something if she found out that Peter Parker is Spider-Man. Also, he wears the mask to keep his life as Spider-Man separate from his life as Peter Parker. When they go together, you get stuff like the death of Gwen Stacy. But I digress.

And as for the different perspectives, I'm not sure how a voice recording or a female perspective helps. Hell, you could have a superpowered female recording her adventures and such in an audio format. What makes the story less cliche isn't how it's told, but who's telling it. What's the character like? Is he/she funny? Sad? The traits of the character are more important than gender or superpowers.