Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180613055407/@comment-33937557-20180615104926

Now I didn't read the first draft, but going by the messages left over from it I can see your edits. I'm assuming the guy who was practically exploding, in the beginning, wasn't near as bad off as he was this time around. You gave me, at least, enough backstory for Billy Wong to feel poorly for him. Dr. Wilhelmson's later death makes sense: he walked into the bathroom and literally got hammered by the crazy hammer guy.

When I read the portion concerning both the first appearance of crazy hammer guy and the mother with the sick child, I had one question: where did the mother go? Did she just stand there and wait for hammer guy to start his mad chase, did she run, what happened? I know it's a really small detail, but I felt it a little jarring that either she or the child didn't react at all to the crazy hammer guy.

"Murders" plural was used before. In this second draft of yours, I only found one instance of a certain death, (unless I suddenly can't read or something). Did you fix this as well?

All in all, I thought it was good. Hopefully, I've given a good response here, but you never know with me. Hospitals category sounds perfect.