Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20151001074315/@comment-26326346-20151005065231

Thank you for the feedback :)

I think I know what the issue is with the dialogue, I tried to make Ned talk as though he had a fetish for using British words despite being American, he'd use words like "righto and right you are". In hindsight, that seems like a dumb choice on my part. I'll comb through the story tomorrow and fix Ned's dialogue.

Ned wasn't thankful for wearing layers of clothing, well he might have been, but it wasn't stated, it was just a statement that was used from the author's perspective to describe the situation; he would have been blown over had he not had the layers to help weigh him down.

I also agree with you in regards of the blizzard and will fix that tomorrow as well :)

Thanks again for the feedback! I hope you enjoyed it and that those couple of hiccups didn't ruin the adventure for you.