Talk:A Figure in the Fog/@comment-25226524-20150418204315

Great story. Good flow, good characters, and well thought out. You should read Dan Simmons's Summer of Night, as that's what came to mind while reading this. There are plenty of stories revolving around adolescents disappearing near some type of structure, but Summer of Night is the one that came to mind (it's a nice read in my opinion). The dialogue may have been off just a little here and there, but it was pretty solid overall. I'm not sure if you were inferring that the father was going to light the place on fire by using his "booze" as an accelerant, but if the bottle he had at that time was the same bottle or "forty" he had earlier, it wouldn't remotely have any effect. You're probably aware of that fact, but I wanted to let you know that that was how it came across, so you may want to alter it some way. Anyhow, I really enjoyed the story, and the fact that you managed to bring Dan Simmons to mind is a good sign. Good job friend; keep up the good work.