Talk:Alice/@comment-30402176-20161104164954

Pretty random. I felt that the ending left me feeling more confused than surprised. It just didn't make sense. We know little about Alice from the beginning; just a tidbit about her hobby involving animal craft; that would have made the ending relate better with the beginning. Also - Alice's personality isn't consistent enough to be believable. One minute she's so shy she seems to forget her own name upon introducing herself, the next she teases Marcus for being a big "baby".

Also - I feel a little upset when I read a list of characters' names which are never put to good use later on in the story. If we only hear a name or two on one occasion - then we aren't going to want to have to remember them later on unless we meet them again later. So that's another thing that gets me.

I'll give this a 4/10. Needs work.