Talk:Crawl.mov/@comment-5012163-20150430002502/@comment-26100710-20150430062928

Ok. You asked ;) I actually liked the ending a lot. One thing, and it's just a thing with me, a rule of writing is you need to write (or type in this case), all numbers under 10. One through nine should be spelled out. Also, repetitive use of "The college". Maybe a little more detail. The satanic sacrifice is a little cliché and actually unlikely. Maybe try a different reason for the sacrifice? You have a good idea here and with some tweaking I think it could be fabulous. ;) I'll change my rating and say 9/10 for the idea. Keep at it. I think once you start figuring your voice out you could create some great stories.