Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36012429-20181009201641/@comment-9041013-20181010181157

Well, Lucy, I told you how I feel about this story, no need to repeat myself Good job once again!

DrBobSmith wrote: Interesting, very interesting. It makes you think. Also, it's solidly done.

If it is about someone you know, I hope the Dad is staying clean and sober.

I suggest leaving a message for Jdeschene. This is her kind of more subtle horror story. If there's a problem, she'll spot it. Bob, I hardly see any need for asking anyone specific to read this and judge this from a plot stand point as if they were a professional with scholarly insight on the subject. None of us here are literature researchers here. It's all about the feeling one gets from reading this story, there is no right or wrong in that sense. Horror, or rather fear is a dynamic emotional state, this story evoked some sort of fearful reaction in you and thus it did it's job.

It's all about your personal feeling, if you don't like it, you don't like it. If you do, you do. It's no science.

From a pure literary technical stand point, Spirit wrote a perfect short story; there are clearly defined characters, there's a plot compiled from an exposition, a central conflict, a soothing action, and resolution. There is an atmosphere, there are some literary devices sprinkled all over the story, thus there's nothing wrong with that side of the story.