User blog comment:KreepyMooNer/New story soon!/@comment-4750363-20141104201400

I think it's the one you uploaded.

Length isn't a problem.

In the Coach Snasp story, the problem is that you jumped too far into the climax.

You made some paragraphs as an introduction, and then it went straight into the climax and the ending. It made it look rushed.

I recommend you try to delve a bit more into what led to that situation at the end.