Talk:Turn It Off/@comment-28428152-20180325193932

This was really good! I've been reading pastas for about five years, so if a story manages to give me chills while I'm proofreading at 2 in the afternoon while listening to Peaches, then it's pretty damn good.

Though, I would highly suggest going back and preeofreading, as there are a lot of errors with punctuation and with run-on sentences. The messages that the protagonist and Chris send each other in the beginning seem a little unnatural, too. And I'd also detail the story about the cat lady instead of just mentioning it, I think that could add a lot. Maybe makke the cat-lady in Chris's story have some more fucked-up features or something, because when I think of a lady with a cat head I just think of a Khajit from Elder Scrolls (sorry!).