Talk:Sin Hallucinations/@comment-4849011-20150211010628

This was an interesting cautionary tale about how obsession can lead to sin and thus negative consequences, and how we hurt ourselves when we wish harm on others. The double meaning of the title is interesting too, and I appreciate the notes at the end. I do have one piece of advice - you need to start a new paragraph when there's a new speaker. I noticed a couple places where the dialogue ran together.