Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24124694-20150409052043/@comment-26248322-20150409133725

I think you did a fantastic job of writing each scene, but it seems like there is no transition between each scene. I think you could've had the priests entrance a bit more smooth. Why does he come over out of nowhere? Why didn't he know already about her son? I really like the way you include religion. Usually it gets really cheesy when people try to include God. Why did she take him to the emergency room instead of calling an ambulance though? It was pretty good overall. I'd say about 8/10.