Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20151203195012/@comment-27363480-20151208232813

Good pasta just a few things you need to fix! Try adding more detail, for example the more in depth you get in the discriptions of hell or the slow decent into madness of the main character  will make your audience feel more on edge and maybe even  genuinely terrified. The only other things I would like to add are that there are some grammar mistakes but if you look your piece over again you can easily fix them. Other than that great pasta!