Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25196212-20140723003632/@comment-24101790-20140724121154

Let's keep discussion on track here... You want to improve your story right? Just for future references on cliches. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Creepypasta_Wiki_talk:Creepy_Clichés. Give it a read through.

There are a large number of issues with punctuation, spacing (You have a tendency to not put a space after using a comma,like this, as opposed to how it is correctly done), capitalization, (I, not "i") grammar (it's=it is, its=possession), and misspellings. (A lot of these issues were present when I originally deleted your story and are still present on your revised version.)