Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20140822035320/@comment-25170312-20140822181240

'Shined' is a word, but you're right that I was supposed to use 'shone'. Good catch. XD

You're not a bad reviewer, because you make good points. The story is about the house, and I should at least describe it more. Before I even read your comment, I realized that I should at least describe the walls. I didn't bother because they were just blank. But I guess that's something you would want to know, lol.

On Long Island, if you build a simple postmodern home, they tend to all look the same. At least one room has a really high ceiling. The second floor usually has a balcony that overlooks the first floor's high ceiling room. The walls are all white and blank, and the large room usually has one wall that's almost all windows. In this case it was the front wall. The floors are all this shiny brown wood that doesn't look real. There's nothing interesting or unique about the house at all, except for the roof. (maybe I should add this stuff in?)

And the first paragraph was just copy/pasted from something I had said in the comments of my first draft... which is super lazy! You basically called me on my laziness without realizing. So again, good catch. Don't say you're a bad reviewer. You helped me out with the first draft as well. Thanks! XD