Talk:The Will of the Fates/@comment-35911608-20200221005206

The Will of the Fates - by Vngel W (#8, Strength)

A great horror fantasy story. I could just hear Soul of Cinder in the background during the final duel with the Corrupted, very well executed. When the monster was on screen, I could really feel its power and threat to the characters. Your writing style in and of itself is also phenomenal. The usage of Strength was fine, I like that you seemed to take from the Reversed side of the card’s meaning as well in some aspects.

However, the middle chunk of the story and the very ending are what deducted some points for me. The creepiness wasn’t really there, I never felt like the characters could be jumped by the Corrupted at any moment; they felt a little too safe. The captain’s appearance and actions also felt rather out of left field for me. This is just me, but I would have preferred to see the Corrupted be the thing moving down below, leaving our main character drained from the previous fight (low energy, another trait of Strength Reversed) and down one man due to his stupid actions. Regardless, I really liked the story and was thoroughly entertained.

Style - 5/5

Creepiness - 3/5

Enjoyment - 4/5

Use of Theme - 5/5

Grand Total - 17/20