Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37482493-20190226165738/@comment-37138398-20190226192342

Hmmm. It seems disjointed. The overall concept is good, but the descriptive language is lacking. I was unsure if it was an internet forum or a group meeting face-to-face. Also, it sound emtionless, like someone dictating the entire thing. Maybe add more emotion, and add some more details, too. Other than that, the idea of the story is really good!