Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5888665-20151002020203/@comment-5888665-20151016225536

Demuerto wrote: I see a few issues. But the biggest being that it's not really that creepy. I do appreciate the referrence to the underpants gnomes though. Second, no parentheses. If it's not necessary to read then it's not necessary to write. The last thing is your message is too well hidden. I was only able to see your point because you noted it, otherwise I was thinking it was a story about a weird computer glitch. If your trying to make a point, make sure it is obvious by the end. Thank you. It's also funny that you mention the underpants gnomes because that was one of the reasons the admin gave for deleting it: saying "What does this even mean?"