Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20180822012506/@comment-33488654-20180822062944

DrBobSmith wrote: KillaHawke1 wrote: As always, thank you for your feedback. I think you are right, but could you elaborate on, when you say "carefully look up" Im not sure what you are saying Excuse me dear sir, I do not mean to steer us away from the topic or anything, I just wanted to ask if you could look at a draft I made in the workshop. Sir,

What I mean is that you should VERY carefully evaluate whether anything above that point has anything to do with the story. I know if you edit ruthlessly above that point that what remains will be short. Unfortunately, that prelude drags down the real story. We don't need the history of killer bees any more than the story of a man with a revolver who shoots people needs to carefully detail the history of the revolver from the 1580 matchlock rifle to Colonel Colt to the Rollin White patent on cartridge guns that Smith and Wesson squandered to ...