Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39126362-20190414202138/@comment-35711173-20190418093256

The King's Wit,

I took a bit more time with it. You still have far too many basic errors in your English, almost as many as in the first draft from http://www.grammarly.com and https://www.scribens.com/ found even more run-on sentences. You need to check that.

If this is supposed to actually have happened, I need to feel something more reasonable than Dad randomly pops back into the life of his adult son for the purpose of killing him. Cronus had a motive. Why is Dad doing this?

If this is some sort of delusion of the son, we need to feel it. I don't. This person doesn't feel delusional.