Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26075314-20160112043427/@comment-27614308-20160116235925

There's a few grammatical errors here and there, but let's look at your story's innards.

One of the first things I noticed is that the zombies behavior isn't actually that much different. Crave human flesh? Check. Shot to the head kills them? Check. The only real difference is that they're more intelligent. That's not a bad thing, but it is something notable.

But now we get to the "breeding." Generally, cutting someone's arms and legs off is a death sentence. Intelligent or not, I highly doubt all of these zombies have medical degrees. A woman whose arms and legs got ripped and cut off generally won't survive the shock of getting zombie-raped, let alone the period of incubation during pregnancy.

Another thing: If they're smart enough to breed, then even if humanity went extinct, it would be reasonable to assume they'd start breeding with each other. If a male zombie still has living sperm cells, the females more than likely have living ovules.

The story wasn't bad for how it was being written. The writing and plot seem fairly solid to me, but there a few holes in the dynamic.