Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25160824-20140814201358/@comment-5619531-20140815184941

It has a good concept to it, and I like it. But the ending is predictable. Even I knew that the boy would be the person writing the girls' story before I finished reading it.

I would try to make the reader confused, or make it less predictable if you can. If the people who have been here long enough reads this on the site, it'll just be deleted for being predictable. They'll possibly say the same thing that I'm saying. Try to add something that doesn't make the reader think that the person who's writing the story is the boy.