Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25305839-20161107152707

A short Creepypasta. Read it and tell me what I should improve, but be nice about. I wanna become a better writer, not kill myself because I'm a bad writer. Like YouTuber HoodoHoodlumsRevenge says, "We are all adults here, so we can be mature in the comments." (Note: this is an improved version. I have fixed mistakes and added more details, thanks to the help of Jake888 and CryonicSucc.)



Stop fearing the darkness and what lurks in it. People who fear the dark use nightlights which are a waste of electricity and a waste of electricity could result into society collapsing because we run out of energy. Now you might be thinking, nightlights don't use up that much electricity but there are a lot being used around the world which is using a lot of electricity. And don't forget about the electricity being used to power cars, household appliances, lights, and etc. All of that put together is using up electricity!

Stop fearing Gays. Their feelings will be hurt and it will want them to get revenge and have a war that's between straight and gays, which will end up with lots of people dying. Now, this may sound crazy but if you think about, it could happen. Mankind has gotten into war for crazy reasons, usually because of beliefs and religion. We actually have gotten into war because of a pig! (I'm serious, look up the Pig War on Google.) So it's possible America will have a Civil War between the homosexual citizens against the hetrosexual citizens. Or, we could go into a World War III where all homosexuals across the world go against all the hetrosexuals across the world, and if we go to another World War, it is said that we will use nukes which will wipe out most of humanity. Also, it could be some type of Cold War, which could tear society apart.

Stop fearing spiders. People who are afriad of them would try to kill them all. If we succeed, which will take decades or centuries, it will end with an over population of bugs and other invertebrates since their are no spiders to eat them. With so many bugs, they will destory our crops and there will be a lack of food for the 7 billion people in the world. Parasitic bugs will kill off our livestock and other domestic animals and disease-filled bugs like mosquitoes will spread deadly diseases, killing off humanity. If this spider genocide takes place, it will take decades or centuries like I said earlier, but it could happen a lot faster people start spraying spider pesticides everywhere across the world, diminishing the population. Now, there will be a lot of spiders, but not as much. Then, there are the predators that eat spiders, which will also diminsh the spiders. There's also pollution, which could kill off more spiders. Finally, there will be spiders that are sent to extinction by people killing them off like we usually do like squishing them. This could happen since there have been animals similar to spiders that have been sent to extinction.

Stop fearing mice and rats. Just like spiders, people who fear them will try to kill them all. If we succeed, scientists wouldn't have another animal to experiment on so they can find cures for deadly diseases that could wipe out humanity.

Stop fearing tight, enclosed spaces. If we want more room, we will eventually use up all the land, and eventually, the bodies of water, on Earth and all of the ecosystems will be destroyed from the construction of building more bigger houses and buildings. Most of the life on Earth will be extinct. Without the animals and planets, we won't have air, food, water, and other vital resources that we need to survive. Humanity will be extinct. Also, after all the room being used up on Earth, it will eventually get crowded which will make day-to-day life difficult and if there are still people with claustrophobia in the world while it's crowded, they will panic and go insane and, depending how severe their phobia is and how insane the person is, kill themselves to end their agony.

Stop fearing it all! Fearing keeps us alive but trying not to die will kill us or make us go insane. It's time to face your fears!  