Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26487201-20150615190627/@comment-26475253-20150616183504

This isn't, as I have been told, fleshed out enough. It's too short for any real story to develop. Is there an antagonist? Is there a mission or goal to fulfill? Just make it longer and get down to writing an actual story, not just an idea. The original concept was alright, I suppose.