Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26181085-20150407180904

So I finally made my story for my Oc jack, and it has bits and pieces there that are good, but it's not creepypasta wiki style.. So I need a bit of editing help from any good story artist out there.

http://opticdeviant.deviantart.com/art/White-chapel-origin-story-519974182

Its really good if I do say so.. But I really do want to make a good impression, to kill the whole Mary Sue thing.. I started off simple and slowly shoved his fucked up,life into the readers face ..lol

so check it out, read over it, and tell me some stuff or contribute to me by asking to edit it. Check for grammer, and plot, and over all help make it scary.. Creepy pasta isn't love and nice.. It's about the horror the life endangerments.. I want my character to be a real creepypasta not just an Oc. So help me start a good legend we can all like and read about .. * cough* unlike Jeff 