Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140930223902/@comment-24996913-20141001210353

Reprieve wrote: The amount of suspense is plentiful within this pasta. Only a few punctuation/grammar errors, but it's nothing that can't be fixed. Vivid detail, decent vocabulary, I overall say you did a pretty well job on this. However, it wasn't at all scary. Perhaps if you continue the story, which I would love, and add a twist to the ending, it would be perfect. 8/10

I've actually thought of furthering this, perhaps describing the events that took place in pursuit of the "jars of knowledge". It sort of makes sense to build on that because it's always scarier when it's happening rather than when it's already done. Thank you for your feedback :) I appreciate it.