Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35973449-20180625045115/@comment-26444017-20180629015306

I felt like I was watching a movie while reading this. It works pretty well as a horror story, particularly because the possibility is left open for other people outside the group to become infected.

My only concerns are minor spelling/grammar errors (easily fixed), and the pacing at the beginning and end. It's a rushed feeling that leads into an extended, normally paced story, and ends rushed once again.

My recommendation is to slow down the opening and closing so the pace matches the rest of the story. I would also like to see mention of the symptoms affecting her as she recounts the last few days.

One other thing that tripped me up is that the disease itself isn't well explained. Where did it come from? How was Janice involved? If these were answered, I think I'd be more satisfied, but leaving them ambiguous can work in your favor as well. Up to you.