Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29015383-20160810144309/@comment-25569708-20160812230649

Alright, sorry for the slight wait, but in all honesty it looks like you're pretty well-off here without me. Here are a couple things you could be notified of, however:

"cold-feet" does not need to be hyphenated.

"I hope my message will be able to help you at least (I believe you should put "a" here) little"

Anyway, as far as the story goes, I have to go with Christian's view. I thought the thing was great; the tone of writing, the language used, the length, the "burn" of the story, I thought you did great on all these things. It looks like he was able to help you with some grammar/wording problems already, and there's nowhere where I really feel it sounds odd/wrong. You kept my attention all the way, and I was generally interested in what James was talking about. And I have to admit, once I figured out what had happened with the wife midway through, I was afraid that there was going to be some ham-fisted thing where he basically explicitly says that he killed his wife, but I was relieved to see that there was nothing like that. I think this story is/works best keeping its current subtlety. But yeah this thing is ready to post. Great job here, I really liked this one.