Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-11223544-20140603175321

Hi. I made a story, but it got deleted because it was unfinished. But here it is.

I was thinking that in the second half of the pasta, the beast turned out to be real and ate Danny's wife and dog, and he fought the monster. Does anyone know how to make that scary? I am kinda new at this. So can I have your feedback? 