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Also about the realism part:

Look, would you enjoy a story that seems random stuff thrown over without a single reason of why they happen or how they happen? Something that doesn't have a background nor an objective?

Your pasta does that in some parts.

The best pastas are the ones that has some kind of reality check in them despite the paranormal part, often in the form of real possibilities, ways ot if happening, the reasoning of the protagonist or the consequences of the actions of the characters/beings of the story.

Otherwise it is a poor attempt and a poorly-cooked story.