Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24714617-20140512023110/@comment-24918243-20140516040224

It's getting better.

But at the risk of nit-picking: "...every new act of mischief he brought upon his terrified kin." I think siblings would make more sense here. Kin is any relative, including parents, cousins, uncles and grandparents. Siblings are exclusively brothers and sisters.

" Finally, they prayed for his death." I find this line cnfusing. Evil does not pray. Evil lusts, desires, thirsts. Good prays. You might also let us know how many siblings. right now it could be 2, it could be 10. That makes it hard to visualize them throwing him in the pool.