Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26671016-20141229210634

I had posted this poem to the site, but a few minuted later it was deleted. Are there any changes you would suggest I make before I do the deletion appeal?

Note ~ This was something I had originally written for school, where I had to personify an emotion.

Dread shuffles slowly,

Along the alley, Towards me he slinks. Piercing, yellow eyes, He clutches a knife. His breath is putrid. Those dark boots thudding, Cape swishing softly.

I try to back up, But there is a wall. My heart is pounding, I can't move or breathe. His silence scares me.

His head looms so close,

A hooded visage.

Pale hands touch my face.

 I am terrified.  