Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25083225-20150405053205

So I've finally come up with a good topic, characters, and general ideas for my first creepypasta, but its been a bit of a struggle to put my thoughts down on paper. Therefore, I was wondering if the opening paragraph reads well so far. For context, the plot of my story is about the narrator recollecting about a time when he tried to relate and earn the respect of a sociopath, but being/feeling manipulated and having to come to grips with the fact that this person is just incapable of caring, and is only out for his selfish desires. (also if the title is bad, its just a working title ^^; )

          '  I am, in no way, outgoing, but I’ve often the mistake of wanting to make the lives of the people around me brighter. I have had to manually teach myself the virtues of “self-preservation” and keep myself from trying to analyze and relate with any human being that I’ve known for over a day or two. Regardless, I don’t think I could ever completely quit empathizing with others. It is my firm belief that everyone on this planet has a spirit, a soul that deserves recognition regardless of how misunderstood the entity behind said soul is. Even the most heartless people who commit the most heinous acts have goals and aspirations. As overly-optimistic and delusional I may sound, I think there’s a salvageable bit of good in everyone. With this is mind, I have no clue how anyone could be completely unconcerned and ambivalent to not only people, but the entire world around them. '  