Talk:Alius/@comment-27704373-20161210164537

Yeah that's quite creepy. Not the scariest though, more just unfortunate and dangerous. Good try though, well written, good words and narrative. Plus it is a good story, the only thing missing from it is creepiness. If this weren't a creepypasta it would be an amazing story, but because it is, its lacking scare which is what you need in a creepypasta.