Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25201620-20141130224137/@comment-25170312-20141202003118

I get that this is part one of something, but there's not enough. A killer stalks and kills his victim, then a mysterious woman tells him he will suffer and disappears. It doesn't make me want to read part two. I don't have any connection with the character. He hasn't really done anything interesting that would get me invested. Then it just ends. You need some kind of hook that makes people want to keep reading. As it stands, the end doesn't do that. There's also a lot of spelling errors, and some confusing grammar. Needs work.