Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44778745-20200102183947/@comment-44778745-20200103134458

Thank you. Honestly until you said something i really didnt realize how many little mistakes I'd made. Ill probably rewrite it because it would be better than fixing it piece by piece.

I like the story ideas and the details too. I'll probably use some of them in the rewrite. The only thing i dont want to do is make the playground creepy. Though i wanted the narrator feeling alone i didnt want it to immediately feel like a derelict haunted place, rather i wanted it to seem like anybody could come by at any moment and just didnt.

I appreciate the honesty though. It really needed the critique and too often people are scared to say anything but "oh its great"