Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20181016215053/@comment-36393004-20181017010955

DrBobSmith wrote: As a writer I identify with it, but I think it would pop far more with a brutal editing. Too much of having the noises around the house, and you're seven paragraphs and over a thousand words into the story before even that starts. That's a third of the way through! We're about 2/3 of the way through the story before the first tangible thing, and that's the shadow on the stairs. You also are about that far in before the first clear description of sensations.

As soon as you had the scratching I knew what was going to happen, at least the general "he really is creating a monster" thing. It's been done on Twilight Zone and other shows. That's not a criticism. It's almost freaking impossible to get a completely original plot. Yeah, I agree with the plot thing. I wasn't trying to make the introduction into the story I was trying to tell long...I think it's just how I write. I think most of my stories end up drug out that way, even when I'm trying to write short stories. Then my endings are abrupt, with the exception of a couple of my stories. Maybe that's what I need to work on.