Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26399604-20160803202244/@comment-26399604-20160804194243

First off, I wanted to thank you for starting the story to begin with. I know alot of people get discouraged to read long stories - some have vaild reasos.

In regards to Chapter 1, thank you for bringing that forward. I actually trimmed a great deal of it several times to what it is now. I was't quite sure if it would hold up it as stands which is why I wanted  get another set of eyes on it. It's clear that it still needs work. I will definitely jump on that.

With Chapter 2, I can see what you mean and I'll try to add a bit more descriptive elements. To be fair, more information will be added as the story continues, but if it leaves a chapter floating too much in thin air, I'll address it. (I actually thought of something that would help, but I will hold back on any corrections for now)

Thinking now on it, if it helps, you could provide feedback on each chapter as you go. If you don't feel like a chapter needs anything added, you can simply address that it's fine as it is or just comment only on the ones that do need adjustments.

I'm going to hold off on any corrections until the full story is read, but I will be taking down notes of things you bring up. Thanks again for reading and I hope you enjoy it!