Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20170819212316/@comment-4893169-20170829164915

''ChristianWallis wrote: There’s a good plot in here somewhere. It just needs to be excavated from the story’s strange obsession with convincing the audience that Lola sucks and deserves to be vilified by the other teenagers. That’s a lost cause; bring the story’s focus back onto the horror and the struggle for survival.''

Thank you once again ChristianWallis for another detailed review. Really appreciate the great editing help here. I'll follow your advice and get rid of the glaring emphasis on Lola sucks and get back on the concentration on horror/survival.