Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150529193644/@comment-24281984-20150530162407

Doom Vroom wrote: Thank you for your honesty, the review is much appreciated :) This was my first attempt at a poem, so I really have no idea what I'm doing (which is why I posted it here) and expected it to be negative.

The poem was about a crazy poor person who broke into a home and started skinning an orange. The home owner walks in on the crazy person and gasps in surprise making his presence known. The crazy person kills the home owner and the eats him with the orange, because he's crazy and doesn't want the potential food (body) to go to waste.

I'll try to figure out how to change/dress it. Thanks again for the advice and feedback! I just saw the notification now. Not crazy about some of Wikia's changes from last year. ._.

It makes more sense when you outline it, but I'd still like to see a reason why the narrator is crazy. What happened to make them that way? Did they live a childhood where food was extremely scarce and developed a hatred for people who wasted food? If your character has at least one plausible reason for doing something (more if you can think of them), it becomes a LOT easier to believe that the events actually happened and therefore greatly increase the scare factor.

Something like this might be better off as a story instead of a poem if you want to keep this premise. Whatever you choose to do with it, good luck, and I suggest giving our Writing Advice blogs a read if you haven't already. They were a very big help when I was newer to this site. ^-^