Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29270351-20160614084334/@comment-28266772-20160614134455

Hey, it's me again. Bet you're starting to get tired of me, eh?

Oh well.

"Her eyes were very distinct, it was just very open." -> Not sure what you're saying here.

" in charge of caretaking the museum" -> Should be "taking care of"

"hyper realistic eyes" -> there's nothing, technically, wrong with this. It's just that, when referring to paintings, people often say "photo realistic". It's up to you if you'd rather switch.

" The management didn't take it away quickly since there's no reason for the painting to be scary because it only showed a standing woman." -> this sentence is a bit awkward. You could probably say the same thing with fewer words. The main issue is that there are two dependent clauses attached to one another "since there's no reason.... because it only...."

"getting insane/got insane" -> in English people say "going insane/went insane".

"which caused" -> should be "which had caused".

So those are all the errors I saw, and they were all very minor errors. I enjoyed the story, and I thought you're writing has much improved! I would say, at this stage, you could either just try submitting the story, or ask an admin directly if they think it would meet quality standards.

Best of luck.