Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25326117-20160701011727/@comment-28266772-20160701144600

So these are the only mechanical issues I noticed.

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with it's best friend. -> its/it’s

I really hate not having a driver's lessons, -> do you mean license?

Really, what the hell is wrong with me! -> needs a question mark

where the bus's big windshield is -> I know it’s optional but it’s my opinion that apostrophes that affix to the end of a word that ends in ‘s’ don’t need to be followed by another ‘s’ i.e. bus’ big windshield is

Also you have a tendency to use double spacing. Again, I know it's optional, but it's just so damned ugly.

And one last thing - there are a few instances where you use 'it' to refer to people. Is this intentional? If so - fair enough.

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So overall I thought this was good, but not really creepy or scary. It was a great story that I thought offered great insight into autism and the problems it can cause for sufferers. Like I note above there were very few mechanical issues, and it's written to a high standard. You use language to very effectively convey the narrator's experiences, and it shocked me how much it reminded me of the way some autistic people speak. Overall - awesome, just not sure if it counts as a creepypasta.

