Board Thread:News and Announcements/@comment-11307310-20130707033533/@comment-6761334-20130707082240

I think it's a good first pasta, but it might be more at home on the spinpasta wiki. Petey, although a dog, is possibly what might be considered "jeff inspired."

Also, there are a few cliches. Instead of directly saying, "You're next" try to end on a note of forboding where the users are afraid of the creature on their own.