Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27930893-20160312081235/@comment-24101790-20160312082203

The story is incredibly generic and borrows a lot from I'm Worried About My Son, so much so that it feels like a carbon-copy of the original story. Additionally the entire story is condensed into a single paragraph and the plot is rushed/lacking description. Couple that with awkward wording ("He holds his severed  teddy bear at his side and stands there.") and rushed plot, and you have a story that is below quality standards.