Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20150306110837/@comment-26027160-20150306212911

I agree. The story makes very little sense to me at this point. Joggers dissapearing, then chairs randomly appearing (unless they symbolise eternal rest), then "deadly silence", "boiling" water and... The Headless Horseman Without a Horse. I don't see how these things are connected with each other. Why are the victims sitting on chairs? What is the purpose of those chairs? Why disembody joggers?

You have three major "horrors" here- the "illusions", the chairs and the headless maniac corpse & co. I don't see how these connect into one picture. Ok, so let's imagine that the woods have a kind of odor drug effect that causes severe hallucinations (chairs, corpses and maniacs). Then I lose sight of any logical conclusion to the story. Stop exercising, kids? (Even though I liked the final lines)

The higher chance that the story might "happen" to the reader, the creepier the story is. At least from my experience.

Your grammar is okay, though there are some sentences that sound a bit off.

Otherwise, I enjoyed your story. Nice job!