Creepypasta Wiki:Deletion Appeal/Archive 16

Clown Doll
I Don't know how this dosent meet quality standards, I have no spelling errors and made sure my story isn't stupid anyway

also my auto correct likes to screw up things a lot

But please post my story despite my errors i don't care if people bully me or anything please

Sincerley, Mr.HattyHattington


 * Your story wasn't up to quality standards, please click that link and read it over as the errors in your story were numerous and quite large.


 * Spelling/wording issues: "I saw looked aboanded" (abandoned), "I sunndenly (suddenly) wake up in my bed," Additionally the story is told in past tense, make sure your tenses reflect this. "I got too freaked out to dilly (-) dally any further. I ran like fast, and faster,and faster...." The protagonist is writing this, so they should avoid writing as if this is a narrative. "an english man toy maker" man is not needed as it is implied in toymaker. It's=it is, its=possession. "Son, its (it's) not", "its (it's) just some lump", etc.


 * Spacing issues: after using commas, periods, conclusive punctuation; you need to space it. "there,they", " joy,unfortunately,he", "glitch,it", etc. Capitalization issues, the start of dialogue and thoughts should be capitalized. "it was just a dream", ""don't replace me...", etc.


 * Punctuation issues: "the thing that struck me most was a sad looking,clown(comma not needed) doll." Commas missing before dialogue: " saying "don't (Don't) replace me...please..."."


 * Story issues: The story has been told quite a few times before and the issues above really make the story seem rushed and not checked out. I'm sorry, but the story is fairly generic and there are far too many errors for it to pass our quality standards. I'm turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:07, June 26, 2015 (UTC)

I'm sorry, if it has as many errors as I suppose it has since it got deleted then it can't be posted unless they get fixed.

Now let's see...I'll read it now.

Okay, confirmed. It has some serious storyline errors here. It simply can't be around unless they get fixed. Here we go:

So the main character is walking through a decrepit neighborhood. Fine with that, although he sure knows a lot about the doll's mechanism even if he never activated it. There aren't even indications it activated itself or something. The information just...appeared here without rhyme nor reason without the laughter you say happened. The order of events is a mess there.

Just after that we have a whole paragraph of heavy exposition. It's like you suddenly interrupted the story to tell something else, it sticks out like a sore thumb. Try to integrate the exposition in, I don't know, a conversation, anything that isn't just this thick paragraph. Besides how the hell did Joel find out all this? Just that easily? It can't have happened as simple as you're making it look here. Try to go into more depth to make this all more natural.

One thing more: what was so special about that doll the main character needed to take a photo of it and had it in mind during night to the point he couldn't sleep? Absolutely nothing besides it laughing and shaking and even then nobody would think about it further than 'huh that was weird'. That'd be the end of it.

Then a dream happened...a dream, right? Then the clown doll appeared, once again without rhyme nor reason. Why would that happen? The main character was merely a teenager who was passing through the street, he literally had nothing to do with the doll. Why would it take the time to go to his bedroom and possible kill him?

All in all, there are way too many plot flaws here. I recommend you sit down and rewrite the general plot, give reasons for what's going o.

--&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 22:08, June 26, 2015 (UTC)

Try again?
I hope I'm doing this right. I believe my creepypasta was deleted due to the '?' in the title. I didn't realise that such a symbol was not permitted. It was a simple mistake and I would be happy to rename my story. ('Disconnect' works well for me.) As for misspellings and grammatical errors within the story's text, many of these are in the context of an online chat and are used to distinguish between characters. I would be grateful if my creepypasta could be considered for 'undeletion'. Many thanks, --FervidColt (talk) 00:09, June 27, 2015 (UTC)FervidColt


 * We don't delete stories for punctuation issues in the title. Please read this for more explanation. Your story starts off as if you forgot to include the introduction: "Once we’d got the “asl” thing out of the way, she wanted to know what my name was." This isn't a good introduction and does little to hook the audience in to read it.


 * Grammar: While you could argue that the grammar (in the chat logs) was intentional, when it crosses over into the narration, it only causes problems. "It was light and flannelly, and hopefully wouldn’t make me sweat too much.", "Maybe this Kelly would turn out to be fun after all. (?)", "my gut shrivelled in a single motion. " These issues make it seem like you wanted to write a story without having to deal with the grammar, spelling, punctuation, capitalization aspects of it.


 * Story issues: As mentioned above, there are a umber of issues above and the story/chat log itself comes off as plain. (The story has been covered multiple times before and your rendition is a carbon-copy of other chat-based creepy pastas. I'm sorry but your story feels rushed, has multiple issues with grammar, punctuation, spelling, and capitalization, and feels like it is re-hashed from other stories. This appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:26, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

That's fair enough. Thank you for responding so quickly. --FervidColt (talk) 00:40, June 27, 2015 (UTC)FervidColt


 * No problem, feel free to check out the writer's workshop and post your story there for feedback as they can resolve a lot of these issues before they go up against quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:42, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

I wrote a story called "Z-z" and you deleted it. Why? What was wrong with it? I had double checked it! Avsimspurple (talk) 00:47, June 27, 2015 (UTC)Alysha Sims


 * The deletion appeal is for contesting a deletion, not for asking why it was deleted. If you want that answer, message Underscorre, If you think it was up to quality standards, go through with this appeal. (Hint: don't.) EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:49, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

Transcendence got deleted with no apparent reason.
Trascendence has been deleted. This fact surprised me as I thought I had made a pretty decent pasta (compared, of course, with others on this wikia). The thing is, I'm spanish. That means I'm not a master on the english language. However, I made sure my story had the least gramatical/orthographical mistakes possible. I asked english friends, not only about the ortography, but the quality of my composition and some were quite supportive with it. I don't know your quality standards, as I'm not an admin or moderator, but I kindly insist on the revision of my story, and a reason for its deleition in case it remains being not good enough. Hope you understand why I ask for this. I'm not a newbie on writing short stories, but this one was the first I published on the Wikia and it immediately got deleted. I feel a bit of curiosity about your reasons, nothing else. Waiting for an answer.


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. Starting with the basics, remember to space out your paragraphs to avoid accidentally joining paragraphs. (As seen above)


 * Wording: "But transcendence is different: you don't have to be alive to be transcendental." Avoid starting sentences with conjunctions, also avoid redundancy by not repeating words (transcendence.)"I found a city. I found a naive (naïve) woman with some spare room. I found a job. I found a new home.". "...who contributed to humanity development..." Awkward phrasing: "the development of humanity." "Specially (especially)when", "surviving on (in) the forest would be nearly impossible.". Spelling: "exitted", "existance", etc.


 * Multiple fragmented sentences: "A blink. A scratch. A sudden banging noise. And I could see everything.". "I can make this pathetical (pathetic) world dissapear (disappear)using"


 * Punctuation: "I don't want to die"." (punctuation left outside of dialogue. "Yet it was one thing" Capitalization: "jewish (Jewish) deity"


 * Story issues: The "I'm watching you through the screen ending is fairly clichéd and while the premise is interesting, the story really didn't have any build up or tension. The experiments lacked description and that made the story feel lacking. I deleted it for not being up to quality standards and I stand by that. There are a lot of issues here the need to be resolved. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:40, June 27, 2015 (UTC)

SuperVirus.Fig
Sorry I didn't spell check it how long do I have to wait before I can upload it again or can I just edit the oneI already made


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. That means that unless this appeal is passed, your story cannot be uploaded. Unfortunately you've made no improvements to your story. Starting with the basics. There are coding errors Virtual Diary entry 567 that are on every line of the story.


 * Punctuation issues: "Today my freinds (sic) were really mean to me while we were playing borderlands 2 ("Borderlands 2".) they (They) said I wasn't the funniest person they've ever met and I think they weren't kidding which is messed up,(should be a period.)Also" Punctuation missing from multiple sentences. " found this on virus website called virusmarket.com the only reason I was doing this and was okay with it was because my brother set up this cool thing I didn't really understand how it worked at first but it's like and extra computer inside of my computer that I can just close out of so anyways I didn't find this website on the deepweb you know the thing thats like all rapists and perverts no offense because I was too scared I would get caught by the goverment so anyways when I clicked on the website it was just all black and in giant dripping blood red letters there were the words supervirus I clicked on it and it went to a full black page and the download started in the bottom of the screan so I just emailed it to all my friends a few seconds 'lol I got them'."


 * Capitalization issues: " i'm (I'm) going to pay them back with viruses", "tetris", "Bot", "Hyper" etc. Wording/spelling issues: "relly good", "freinds (sic) were found", "belive", "reasponded", etc.


 * Story issues: " friends (sic) were found with extreme liquified brain syndrome" is not a real disease, describe it as opposed to making up an illness. Then there's the ending. "are liquifidng meh braindfffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffff". How is the author writing this and how have they posted it? The entries have a lot of issues and the plot has a lot of issues. I'm sorry, but I'm going to turn down this appeal for the reasons listed above. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:30, June 28, 2015 (UTC)

Poisoned Lily
My pasta was named 'poisoned Lily' I looked it up before hand and the name wasn't used, I put time into the story so it would be top quality but when I finally post it to the wiki for one minute it as deleted.

I'm annoyed that two of my pastas had been deleted by an admin twice now just because it wasn't to the wikis Quality standers. I check for spelling errors: only 1 (I spelt the like thee) I check for grammar mistakes: None I read my story time and time again to make sure that it was told correctly and was not lazy.

If I had made any mistakes to do with visual or source stuff please tell me not delete the whole story! Dude! I tried my hardest

Mimimoo-chan (talk) 15:31, June 28, 2015 (UTC)Mimimoo-chan

(sorry for the stupid user name)

Quality issues are almost never about spelling or grammar or visual stuff.

It's about the story.

Allow me to tell you the flaws your story has:

First than all, why does a school have king cobra venom? At least apparently in permanent exhibition? There's really no reason for that to happen, specially since king cobra venom isn't something to buy in a pharmacy with a dollar. If this were a college, specially an important one, it'd be understandable, but the logic here is terrible.

Bot let's suppose it's possible for this high school to obtain snake venom and let it lay around in a laboratory...and in the wrong place, because nobody in their right minds would keep venom in middle of the acids and alkaline.

Second, so a week passed. Did the school really never notice a bottle of deadly venom was stolen? No efforts were done? Did that bottle stay in the desk in plain sight and her parents didn't see it? More logic flaws.

Spelling error: 'She was going to poison her own farther.'

Then she kills her father...with a mace. She injects him with venom and then when he wakes up all groggy she hits him with a mace.

Do you realize how badly assembled the plot is? She stole venom...and she only used to awaken her father. He didn't even have any time to process what was going on! Why the hell would she do such thing as injecting him and not leaving him there to die? The deed was done, it was just matter of letting the venom do its job! You practically made everything that had happened so far meaningless.

This just makes no sense.

Besides the way she. killed her mother, I mean how she got all furious...is not very well written. It seems so sudden, almost emotionless despite you describing how it went. You need to make the main character actually feel emotions, here you said what she was feeling but nothing really demonstrated it.

And finally:

"Studies haven't found out was was used to poison the victims but are close...."

Do you know how easy it is to find out what snake venom bites people? It's actually pretty easy. Any competent forensic worker would have found out it was cobra venom in no time.

So all in all, your story is riddled with logic flaws and that killed any quality it may have. Take a good look to your plot and rewrite it so it covers all plot holes.

Good luck.

--&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 15:59, June 28, 2015 (UTC)

Seduction   -Susie Suicide-
I'm very new on this website and genuinely confused, I don't even know if I'm posting this in the right spot. But why was my story deleted? None of it was stolen, I used good gramer, and I thought it was a good story! Can you tell me what was wrong with it so I can fix what was wrong and repost it?

How do sign my post? I'll just use those wavy things...

~


 * it was deleted for not being up to quality standards.


 * This blog on OC/CPC characters should help illuminate a lot of the issues present in your story. Your story comes off as more of a bio than an actual story. The report and then the physical description (twice) make up half of the written story and is fairly generic. This feels like just a vehicle for introducing your character and there is little story here.


 * Punctuation issues: At times in the patient file, you use conclusive punctuation and at other times you don't. "Patient's height: 5'11", "Patient's weight: 145 Lb", " Date of arrival: 3/9/10" Commas missing where needed: "In the next two days I saw her, she was beautiful.", "I'd do anything for us to be together even though I don't even know her name...", "Take precautions and whatever you do do not talk to strangers", etc.


 * Wording issues: "about a collage (college) student", "she prays on women" (Preys), etc.


 * Capitalization issues: " disorders: Insane. Bipolar, Schizophrenia (schizophrenia), and Photographic Memory (photographic memory)", "against Homosexuality (homosexuality)", "She wore a Purple (purple) and", etc.


 * Story issues: You change mediums frequently and with no warning. You go from a report to dialogue, " "Sir! Patient #10279 has escaped!" " (Which by the way, dialogue doesn't need to be underlined), to a news report, to a suicide note and it just feels like you're jumping around. The news report doesn't feel like a news report (Why describe her clothing? People change clothes on a daily basis so that is a poor identifier.) and the suicide note has a fairly ridiculous opening: "Dear who the hell ever finds my body". Typically a suicide note is to explain why they are ending their lives and not a play-by-play of their last moments. "I was watching about it on the news and there was a knock on my door, so I went to answer it."


 * You describe Susie three separate times. (Once in the psych evaluation, once in the news report, and finally in the suicide note. All of these basically say the exact same thing and really feel like padding. I'm sorry, but your story has way too many issues and is not up to our quality standards.

Anglerfish
No reason was given for why this pasta was deleted. It's obviously up to the quality standards, as it's a previously-published short story -- there are no formatting, spelling or grammar errors. There's enough plot for a micropasta (though it may take the reader a moment to figure it out; the title is a big hint). Maybe the issue was copyrights, but in that case, I'm the author of the story and have the rights to republish it. Please undelete it. Thank you!

LouisRakovich (talk) 23:51, June 30, 2015 (UTC)LouisRakovich


 * Actually the story was the reason it was deleted. There seem to be a number of contradictions and awkward phrasing in the story.


 * Wording issues: "Not much older than a girl-child, and how old is she, really?" Girl-child seems redundant. It would be like saying food-burger. Girl and child imply the same thing. A number of fragmented/broken sentence: "Old enough.", "But strange.", etc.


 * Story issues: The story feels very bare bones and needs a lot more fleshing out. Dr. Conrad picks up a girl at a restaurant and takes her back to her room where it is revealed she's an anglerfish-esque entity. It could be an interesting/involving story if more description was put into the characters and their actions were more expanded on. It just feels anemic without any real horror elements until the end and even there, it is one that has to be inferred by the reader as opposed to being utilized effectively. See Lovecraft's The Horror at Red Hook for a similar plot that builds suspense and horror.


 * The ending comes off as anti-climactic without any real sense of tension. "The girl whimpers. In the new half-darkness, she’s glowing with a faint white light" At least explain to the audience how the anglerfish hunts and create a sense of danger or tension. It really feels like this is an abridged version of a story as opposed to a good short story that cuts out parts that would build an interesting background or involve the readers in the story. Here is a guide on what makes a micro pasta good and common issues authors fall into while writing these stories. As it stands, the story has number of issues involving wording and plot, and really needs some work. It is not up to quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:09, July 1, 2015 (UTC)

Pretty Legs
mine (Mine) got deleted for no reason, i (I) checked my spelling and made a good story, you didn't (didn't) even give any one a chance to read it, when i (I) posted it i (I)checked back a bit later and saw that there were / symbols all over that i (I) didnt (didn't) put there and my story was already deleted before i (I)could fix anything, please put the story up ,(Space not needed) it deserves to be read


 * Coding errors that are present on every line: "Vickie Marshall was a waitress at burnie's pancake house in Louisville, Kentucky, she was a attractive woman, 26 years old, green eyes, long black hair.

" Your story is on large paragraph which in our quality standards is a big no-no.


 * Capitalization issues: "house on south street, (South Street)" Street names are proper nouns as are TV shows. "x-files ". "Linda said(comma missing) " i (I)will come visit you Thursday, "(Space not needed), etc.


 * Wording issues: " One day Vickie was at home, (space not needed) cooking dinner while the x-files played on her 42 inch plasma screen in the living room, she just set the table when there was a knock on the door, she opened it and there was no one there, she looked and saw a note on her step, she grabbed it and took it inside and read it , it read(comma missing) " such pretty legs you have, i (I) think on thursday i (I) will take them"" Run on sentence,


 * Punctuation errors: "girl(apostrophe missing)s legs again", etc.


 * I'm sorry, but I couldn't even finish this story due to the multiple punctuation, capitalization, wording, grammatical, and story issues. This appeal is being denied for not meeting the bare minimum quality standards for this site and in its current state does not deserve to be read due to the lack of attention paid to the story.. Please take the time to read and proof-read your stories before submitting them. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 06:55, July 5, 2015 (UTC)

A Fair End

 * Please read the header next time when making a deletion appeal as posting stories in their entirety clogs up the appeal. Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards.

Wording issues: "She waved her tail vigorously to the (her) sides greeting her master." (the sides could imply another side.), "That moment I felt something I hadn’t felt since forever." Fragmented sentences: "Until now." You also start a number of sentences with conjunctions which makes the story appear choppy.

Punctuation issues: A majority of dialogue is missing punctuation. "Mommy won't be joining us for dinner tonight, Molly", “The name is not important. Only life is”, “Life”, etc. Capitalization issues: "“Yes mother” It (it) said.", "Only life is” It (it)", etc.

Story issues: The letter needs to be spaced as it is one large paragraph. Your story shifts perspectives without any indicator. It goes from this: "He went outside the street to buy food for Molly and the next thing he saw was a white blaze that came towards him at great speed." to this: "“Good evening Officer Bradley(comma/period missing)” Chief Hardy said. “What do we have tonight?”"

Story issues cont.: While the introduction is good, the middle and end portions are rushed. Thomas finishes the letter and is killed by the creature. There needs to be more build up to it. (Especially since you build up the necessity to wear the necklace and the wife's fear of the being.) Thomas also randomly blacks out with little to no explanation. "Thomas blacked out in that moment.". When do police give away items that are present in a crime scene? “Excuse me Officer, it seems that you found a necklace in that man’s possession. It belongs to me, it was a gift he got from my granddaughter. I would like to have it back” This is a pretty big breach in police protocol. There is also very little explanation behind the shadow's motivations as well and it makes the story feel anemic and not very fleshed out. Those were the major reasons why I deleted it and why I am turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:14, July 8, 2015 (UTC)

Stopping The Clock
I really dont know why my CreepyPasta was rejected.

Do you think you can tell me what is wrong and I can make a rough draft and show you it?

Sincerely,TheHorridKnocker


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards as you were told when you posted it on your user page and when you later posted it to the site.


 * Wording issues: "Insert page content here." Please proof-read your story. Capitalization: "...A (a) happy person", " Gray hair and Silver,piercing", "Beenie,Trench coat,and Military boots"


 * Punctuation: "When I turned 7(comma missing) it all changed." "On my 7th birthday(comma missing) I was sitting down in my chair",


 * Spacing issues: "present,I", "pale,shaky,and", "me,then" You need to space after using punctuation.


 * Story issues: the story is very rushed and there is little to no build-up. Why does he have a catch-phrase? "said(comma missing) "Knock,Knock...Knocker(')s here to cut the clock..." And how does this catchphrase fit into the story. The ending is very anti-climactic: "2 (Two) weeks later I heard he escaped and was still lurking in the dark woods..." This really has no sense of tension or creepiness due to its rushed nature. I'm sorry, but this story needs a lot of work and currently doesn't meet the bare minimum of quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 03:24, July 8, 2015 (UTC)

Injected into darkness
Hello! Im sorry for my recent attempt at uploading a creepypasta, im not very used to it infact im new. But I should've thought how to upload instead of jumping into it. I would like to ask permission to reupload my creepypasta, but I want to start fresh again. I will type up my story in microsoft word and go to the "Writer Workshop" first to make sure its all good to go before actually uploading it. I will be very appreciative if I can get permission to reupload, I will not jump straight to reuploading it. I will take the necessary steps and procedures before reuploading "Injected into darkness". Again, I apoligise for not taking it slow and not following the necessary steps before uploading. I hope you can allow me to try again. Thank you for your time.

ChaiseV (talk) 22:22, July 8, 2015 (UTC) ChaiseV


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. As you have no updated version, I'm afraid I have to turn down this appeal for numerous issues. Starting with the basics, it was improperly formatted.


 * Punctuation missing from contractions. "I cant remember", "now im (I'm) here", "whats in this facility,", etc. Hyphens missing from words directly impacting on each other. "non stop", "mountain side", etc.


 * Punctuation issues cont.: punctuation missing from dialogue: "" I was an adventurer, but I always had a crew with me, my buddy Jeremiah he was German along with Sarah who was american like me"", "Our associates will be here to talk you soon", "We will try Mr.Everett(space needed), we will try(period missing)", etc. Apostrophes missing from words denoting possession: "Fuhrer(')s private research"


 * Words improperly capitalized, "world war 2.", "im", "We set out all the way to (Censored) in germany." etc. Words improperly spaced: "Sgt.Ferris", "Dr.Gears", "Dr.L", etc.


 * Story issues: Your story also violates the no-spinoff rule by feature the SCP organization. The report format also detracts from the story as the recounting of events needs to be a lot more fleshed out. I'm sorry, but there are too many issues present here and the story violates our site rules so this appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:38, July 8, 2015 (UTC)

Double Take
Okay so I'm new to this sight and I would like to work on my creepy pasta stories. I understand that Double Take could have some minor spelling errors and at one point was possibly a wall of text but I can chage that. I asked the person who deleted my pastas how they didn't meet the quality standards and he didn't answer. But I would like to chage it and seperate it up and change things around and I want to see what people think of my origonal stories Which is why I would like my pasta Double Take to be undeleted. Elf Queen (talk) 05:06, July 9, 2015 (UTC)


 * The story was and still isn't up to quality standards. There are wording, punctuation, and story issues.


 * Wording: awkward phrasing. "They call it Double Take because, it appears to be two separate creatures when it is one. " Redundancy issues, once you've established the entities' name, there is no need to repeat it multiple times. (In one paragraph, you mention Double Take's name eight times in eight sentences.) "The first wound fell upon the child who’s (whose) dying screams woke his father who then was equally slaughtered in their bed." (awkward phrasing) Grammar: it's=it is, its=possession. "it’s voice", "it’s next victim". Whose= indicatory, who's=who is/was/has


 * Punctuation issues: "One is the voice of a small child, male in gender that keeps saying(comma missing) “I want to play.”", "The other is a deeper voice that sends chills down the spine that says(comma missing) “I’ve got plans for you.”", "The mysterious killer said with a chuckle as they approached the bed where the two helpless figures slept.(should be a comma) “Now the pain that you have brought me shall end!”"


 * Capitalization issues: "“Let’s play a game.” The (the) child states(comma missing) unable to be seen.", "“I’ve got plans for you. You're all mine and there is no escape.” The (the) father replied to the boy’s screams.", "“Let me go! Let me out!” The teen yelled as some tears began to fall."


 * Story issues: Dialogue needs to be spaced out so two speakers are never talking on the same line. The ending is also fairly generic. "There was (were) 10 people like Susan who were released then went mysteriously missing(comma missing) well 10 so far. Luckily you might meet Double Take and escape, or Unluckily (unluckily) meet Double Take and get killed if you make a wrong move. (awkward phrasing) Don’t make them angry or you might end up dead." The story also comes off as an introduction to your creepy pasta monster rather than an involving tale due to the fact that its backstory takes a majority of the story and the story in the forefront isn't really fleshed out. I'm sorry, but there are too many issues present here and as I was reading, I kept finding more. I'm going to have to turn down this appeal for the reasons listed above. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:13, July 9, 2015 (UTC)

Time to play
Okay, so I would like to change and I would also like to see what people think of it. I understand that there may be a few errors in it but it's an origional pasta and I tried to do it from the point of view of the creature you know to put a new spin on the usual pasta. But I am new to this site and I am trying to get my writing out there. I didn't get a response when I asked how my story didn't match the quality standards so I am requesting a deletion appeal. Please I would appreciate it so I can see if what I write are good or not. I hope your day is great. Elf Queen (talk) 05:12, July 9, 2015 (UTC)


 * After reading the pasta, I found that it did not follow up to quality standards. The story has no suspense or build up what so ever. The creature/being appears to be bland and rather uninteresting as well as the two other characters. Nothing really develops throughout the course of the story besides the being trying to kill the other two characters. There are some minor grammatical errors, but that can be fixed easily. I suggest develop more of the being and the general plot. Avoid generic monsters and show, not tell.


 * Sloshedtrain  Talk   Contribs   █  10:02, July 9, 2015 (UTC)

The Case of May Canner,1997
I would like to know why The Case of May Canner,1997 got deleted. Thanks


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. This appeal is also being turned down for the same reasons.


 * Wording issues: "I've been in school for investigating for a few years..." Investigating what? Crime scenes, private/personal matters, be descriptive. Redundancy issues: "All the internship required me to do was fetch the boss some coffee and watch and learn but I wasn't alone." (Sub out one of those 'ands'.) "only one of the interns and me (I) stayed.". "Her appearance consisted of blonder (blonde) hair, blue eyes and a birth mark on her right arm.",


 * Capitalization issues: "mommy (Mommy)!", "June 14th and that  Her (her) parents said they were visiting family in Mexico.", etc.


 * Story issues: the computer controlling itself was a generic/cliched addition. If all this is happening around 1997 (see title), how are they using memory sticks, Vimeo, and Youtube? "Now for obvious reasons, I cannot give you the link or put the very video on YouTube or Vimeo." Why would the protagonist put the video on Vimeo if he found it to be so horrific? The descriptions towards the end need work. "Blood was everywhere and I was bawling out me eyes like I never ever did in my life (even when I was a baby).". This line needs some explanation: "But smashing my computer was not an option now because the girl had blonde hair and blue eyes." So the protagonist would have smashed the computer if the child had different eye and hair color?


 * The ending: "Of course the government did not release any information of this at all because they knew it would frighten civilians because the "Panda Man" was reported missing a day before the video was found." The ending needs more of an impact and it really comes off as rushed due to these issues. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:17, July 9, 2015 (UTC)

The Haunting of Bonte
I'm pretty confused about this. The reason for deletion given was that it didn't meet the quality standards, and the example given was the first two sentences of the post with no other explanation provided. The only thing I can think of is that it didn't have a good enough hook and, frankly, I think deleting a page just for that is completely unreasonable.

Additionally, I received a message telling me that I contributed an "Unfinished Page" (which I didn't). Are slight edits of my work not allowed? I was trying to fix the formatting to meet another of your quality standards. Sorry if I didn't do it right.


 * A haunted butt plug? Come on. Now you've been banned for posting a troll pasta.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 01:17, July 10, 2015 (UTC)


 * "Funkytown Prologue" was in fact an unfinished page. It set up the story, but was incomplete. As for "The Haunting of Bonte" starting with the basics, you numbered the paragraphs using hashtags and then you indented the paragraphs. Please take a look at the other stories. Trying to indent your stories can actually cause serious formatting issues. That aside, the story wasn't up to quality standards.


 * Formatting issues: you have multiple speakers on the same line. ""It must have cost you a fortune," one of them said with a gasp. "I was surprised to have found it at all," Caleb responded. "As it turns out, Bonte's son didn't want to follow in his footsteps. He sold all of his father's toys after his death.""


 * Story issues: A lot of the story comes off like a troll pasta. "Caleb's favorite (and recently deceased) male pornstar, Big Daddy "Bunghole" Bonte. Having looked up to Big Daddy "Bunghole" Bonte as his idol, even a sort of mentor, he wasn't going to use such a priceless item. He had plenty of others. His rectum was not worthy.", "Writing the apparent movement off as a side effect of the penis enlargement pills he regularly ingested, he turned his focus to the television.", " "Those dick pills cause some serious hallucinations," he said to himself. "This isn't good for me."", etc.


 * Story issues: if Caleb believes one of the guests were the culprit, why would he send them home? "Hastily, he told his guests to leave and began to search high and low for the missing dilator. There was no sign of a break-in, leading him to believe that one of his guests was the culprit." It just comes off as odd that he would let someone leave even with searching them. Why would the ghost take the dilator, return it and then steal it again? "The antique butt plug stood in the corner. He almost jumped at the sight of it. Relieved to have found it, but still anxious, he shakily picked it up and placed it back in the display case." especially when it murders him later for it. "A grimy hand rested on his shoulder. It smelled rotten. "It's time to give me back what's mine," said the raspy voice of Bonte into Caleb's ear."


 * Story issues cont.: The ending needs quite a bit of work. ""Thanks." The dilator itself was never found." Caleb recently received the item, has no one else had any other issues with the item. The overall plot feels rushed and there isn't much build-up or description of the ghost. Pair that with the item and the story comes off as more of a joke than an actually attempt at a creepy pasta. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:25, July 10, 2015 (UTC)

Pyromaniac
Why was Pyromaniac deleted? This is the third story I have written that has gotten deleted (one was on another account), and it's making me mad. I worked extra hard on this story, I made sure to use good grammar and correct punctuation, and I thought about my story line for a long time. I was sure that this would be the story that didn't get deleted.

Look, I know it wasn't perfect, but it was a lot better than some other stuff you accept on this site. I'm not trying to make anyone mad or start unnecessary drama, I just want my story back up. I'm asking, please. If you don't want it to be up, just please tell me.

P.s, Can i post this on the workshop thing and get advice on it? Asking Alex (talk) 06:34, July 13, 2015 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry, but there're a lot of issues here and the story is not up to quality standards and I'm going to have to deny this appeal.


 * Spelling/wording issues: "An overly exited (excited)", "a (an) 18 year old girl went insane.". Capitalization issues: " 'Pyro', Now (now)", "15 (Fifteen) years ago,", "It's time for bed!" Said (said)..."


 * Punctuation issues: words that impact on one another should be hyphenated. (overly-excited). Punctuation left outside of dialogue ""I guess I will."," Apostrophes missing from contractions and possessive words "The girl(')s name", "man(')s associates", "mans basement", etc.


 * Story issues: The story within the story needs a lot more fleshing out "'He' has a bounty out for me." Why exactly does this man have a bounty out on Pyro? Why does she flee and tell no one or seek no help? That story needs more content as you state its impact on the kids, but the story really isn't that scary, it just comes off as an introduction to your OC/CPC. Then there is this: "she started lighting random objects on fire." without an accelerant, this would be pointless. Additionally the setup of the killer telling the story is a pretty generic twist that has been done a number of times before.


 * Here is a guide about CPCs / OCs. I would strongly suggest taking your next story to the writer's workshop before uploading it as there were a lot of issues here that you overlooked. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:06, July 13, 2015 (UTC)

The Medic on BLU
'''Woah, this is my first creepypasta I ever made! go easy on me! I mean, im a new user! Jease!''' Paper SMG4 From Steam (talk) 00:09, July 14, 2015 (UTC)Paper SMG4 From Steam


 * Your story wasn't up to quality standards. There are capitalization ("My name is Colton, And (and) my steam (Steam) name is...", "windows 7", etc.), punctuation ("called(comma missing) "I promise I will heal you".", " taunt "I promise I will heal you"", etc.) wording/spelling ("courisity", "chanded", "favorate", " respaw", "intead", etc.) and story issues. Please look at the list of cliches as your story has at least two cliches in a fifteen sentence story.


 * Your story is also just a large paragraph and the whole thing was italicized. (And is this post.) Being a new user is no excuse for making low quality story. I strongly suggest you take your next story to the writer' workshop as there are multiple issues present in your story. I'm turning down this appeal as your story doesn't meet the bare minimum quality standards for this site. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:24, July 14, 2015 (UTC)

I'm afraid being new won't give you any special treatment. Now, since you posted here, allow me to tell you the problems your story has, alright?

First than all it's way too short for the plot you were trying to achieve here. The shortness leads to a severe lack of pacing and detail, which absolutely killed your story. That by itself led to its deletion, I bet. Now let's get into deeper problems.

Strange happenings without a concrete explanation? I don't mean it has to follow real life rules, but the stuff you did seems...just random. A tombstone appearing? With your username and all? Where did that just come from? Aaaand...it didn't go further than that. This story simply lacked any plot! The Medic says the same sentence like three times during the story, there's static (which by the way you shouldn't compare to other games because it was unnecessary, simply saying it was static was enough) and the computer went through a blue screen error. There's just no conhesion between these three points, either.

I won't touch the cliché of 'i havent played TF2 since that moment' because that's the least of the problems your story had.

Either way, as a summary: you really need to flesh out a plot here. Right now it just...doesn't have anything to stand on. It seems a group of random happenings without a cohesive logic in the frame of your story. I suggest you write it somewhere first, each individual plot point and you try to link them until you form an overarching plot, that could help.

--&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 00:26, July 14, 2015 (UTC)

PRIMAL
Okay I am new here, but I posted it up as a rough draft, with my story being a bit off with revising as it is only a start. All I wanted, before I went all out with editing and stuff and rereading was to get some feedback from readers. I liked constructive criticism, but just detailing in it over the fact that is was a rough draft is stupid to say the least and for me to say it nicely. Not everything is perfect and I need help form others if I am to make a story good or not, so I do it in my way. rough Draf, Edit, Final Draft.

I can only do so much people.


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards as is the reason this appeal is being denied. (I warned you against doing this on your talk page, please listen next time.)


 * Story issues The broken english severely detracted from the story and made little sense since you're telling the story from a third person perspective so that makes this more nonsensical as it isn't from the perspective of Primal. "He thought to himself, normally himself would answer back.", "He growled more, but seemed to agree, lost food last time when caught.", "Awake food meant being caught, caught meant running to hid, hiding meant no food." Even if it were told in first person, I would avoid using broken English to this extent as it really makes the story a bother to read and limits descriptive elements.


 * Story issues cont.: The dual dialogue makes it difficult when you haven't identified the other speaker. Is this another facet of the beast? If it's the same speaker, then the punctuation/format is incorrect. The audience doesn't know since you avoided elaborating on it. You need to go more in-depth in your story and take the time to make background and a cohesive plot. "'Hungry.' 'Be careful, we don't want to be caught while feeding.'", "'Thin.' 'But tall, meaning more meat.'", "'No other?' 'Parents must be away on vacation.'"


 * Story issues cont.: this really comes off as a means of introducing your OC/CPC and there is little plot or tension to the story. It feels more like a vehicle for introducing the character than an attempt at a creepy pasta.


 * Wording issues: redundancy issues run rampant in the story. "He thought to himself, normally himself would answer back." (himself) You use himself twenty-five times through-out the story and multiple times in the same sentence. Those were a few of the reasons why I deleted your story and am denying this appeal. One final note, we don't accept rough drafts here. We want completed stories that have only minor issues that need to be fixed. Stories with multiple issues rarely get fixed in a timely manner. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 03:26, July 14, 2015 (UTC)

I Saved a Kitten Today
Greetings CreepyPasta admins,

I was surprised that my recent story, I Saved a Kitten Today, was deleted for not meeting quality standards. English mechanics should be very good, and while the story is very brief, there is a coherent plot and a clear progression of events.

Thanks for your time.

== I Saved a Kitten Today (unreviewed) ==

Alex Ross Writer (talk) 02:37, July 15, 2015 (UTC)


 * The story was deleted as it wasn't up to quality standards due to punctuation, wording, and story issues.


 * Wording issues: Fragmented sentences: "Pretty cold, too." "A lot.", "He was still shivering, though.", "Just like his shivering.", "Just like me.", etc. Run on sentences: "It was hard to find where that sound was coming from, because the rain was so loud and the sound (also redundant) was so soft, but eventually I found him, huddled up next to a tree." That sentence would be more effective broken up as two.


 * Wording issues cont.: "He hissed when I got close and when (redundant) I tried to pick him up,". You also shift from telling the story in past tense and move to present. From: "When I was walking past it, I heard" to "he trusts me, and he loves me." and it continues through-out the story. "When he comes out, I bet he’s going to be all warm and fluffy, like freshly dried laundry."


 * Punctuation: hyphens missing from word that have a direct impact on each other. "high pitched" Commas used incorrectly: "Pretty cold, too.", "When I was walking past it, I heard this high pitched crying sound, it almost sounded like a human baby.", "So I stopped, and kind of looked around in the woods for a minute. I", etc.


 * Story issues: until the very end, the story feels more like a regular story, which gives the ending an out-of-place and tacked on feel. There are also a number of plot holes. How old is the protagonist? You mention he has choir and is attending class, but he is old enough to walk home from school by himself. The fact he's interacting with the stray and kissing him implies he's young, but other elements in the story imply he's old enough to be home alone and to walk home from school. This puts him at a very odd age for him to believe that he can dry a cat off in the dryer. I deleted (and then re-deleted) your stories for this issues and that is why this appeal is also being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:53, July 15, 2015 (UTC)

Rosary
I'm not sure why this doesn't meet up to quality standards. What is "quality standards"? I mean, I thought it was pretty gory and pretty disturbing. Is it because there was a bunch of typos that I missed, because I can go back and fix them. I'll reread it twenty times to make sure it's typo-free if I have to. Is it because it's not long enough? I'm just trying to create a new proxy for Slenderman. Or, am I supposed to post the Proxy stuff on another Wiki thing? I'd like for my story and character to become an actual Creepypasta.


 * Starting with the basics, every paragraph has coding issues like this: "  " While not key in the overall quality of a story, it makes edits and reviewing it more of a pain.


 * Capitalization issues: "Shape-shifting (shape-shifting)", "Aquatic Respiration (aquatic respiration)", "Healing Factor (healing factor)", "Night Vision (night vision)", "Danger Sensing (danger sensing).", "You're an Angel (angel)", etc. Punctuation issues: dialogue, both verbal and mental should be in quotations to differentiate it from the narrative. "I must be in the basement, she thought.", "Okay, this is not a big deal. If I can move my arms up behind the chair, I can find the knot an untie myself, she thought.", "This must be my guardian angel, Elisa thought.", etc.


 * Story issues: I would strongly suggest looking over this guide on OC/CPCs. Your story has a tendency to fall into a lot of the problems other stories have had (that led to their deletion). That guide covers most of the issues (over-description that generally focuses on the protagonist's clothing/facial features and has little impact on the story, over-powered characters, cartoonishly evil characters that trigger a catalyst in the plot, catch-phrases like: "Bad kids go to Hell.", etc.) The story also seems more focused on introducing this character than telling an involving/plot-driven story. It just seems to shuttle Rosary from set-piece to set-piece without really building on the characters or plot.


 * There are a number of times where you describe a character's clothing and it has no impact or importance on the progression of the plot. On a final note, we do not accept proxy stories as they violate the spinoff rule, while your story doesn't feature Slenderman, if that's the direction you're proceeding in, you should be aware we do not accept spinoff stories featuring characters from other creepy pastas. I would suggest taking it to Spinpasta. I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to turn down this appeal for the reasons outlined above. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:11, July 15, 2015 (UTC)

May I ask permission to re-upload Rust the Lusty? I changed him and now he is not relate dto Jeff (no more catchphrase and weird feelings)

Rust the Lusty
May I pls ask to reupload Rust the Lusty? I know he was too close to Jeff the Killer but I changed him No more catchphrase No more weird feelings Tnx HamBaconTaco 00:45, July 17, 2015 (UTC)


 * Without a new copy of the story (in pastebin), I'm afraid I have to deny your story under the original reasons (being a JtK knockoff that subscribes to generic/Cliched plot points). Please note that as you are going for an OC/CPC killer story the likelihood of it being denied is high. This guide should cover the reasons why. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:47, July 17, 2015 (UTC)

"Psycho-Marco"
Could you please explain to me what I did wronge with my story, I know it's my first one and I'm a little rusty, but just what did I do wronge?


 * To quote the header: "Please note that this is not a place to ask why your story was deleted; it's for contesting deletions. If you'd like feedback on your story and/or specific reasons as to why it was deleted, you can try posting it on the writing help forum. Admins are not obligated to give a reason for overturning an appeal."


 * However, rather than send you away empty-handed, your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. The paragraphs are too large and need to be broken up.


 * Punctuation issues: if the story is told through dialogue, you improperly used quotation marks. You need to use quotations at the start of every paragraph (closing it with quotations is not necessary if the dialogue continues on the next paragraph.) Additionally commas are incorrectly used when semicolons are needed or commas missing where needed.


 * Wording issues: numerous misspellings "reconized", "aproched", "dinning table,", "sciscors", etc. Run-on sentences: " A month or so after graduation, I was watching the news, the lady started talking about a murder that happened that morning, when they released the name, I realized it was the same girl Marco had a crush on, they said she was violently stabbed to death."


 * Story issues: there are a lot of Cliches present in the story. Cartoonishly evil characters who serve only to trigger the character. Additionally this guide on OC/CPCs should really be read as your story suffers from a lot of tropes. The story also feels very anemic and lacks description or tension. This feels more like an introduction or bio rather than an attempt at a story. Those are a few of the reasons why I deleted your story and why I'm denying the appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 03:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)

Autumn Rose
I understand the reasoning for my story being deleted but it really wasn't low quality. I put a lot of effort into making it a good story and I feel like it wasn't given a chance. I realize there are cliches present within the entire thing however, they were included with good intentions. I fail to understand why the beginning of my story would be read as a cliche and deleted if the first paragraph was read through. It may be a cliche, I'll admit but I'll get rid of that paragraph if need be. Like I said, I put a lot of effort into writing and proofreading this story and it seems unfair for it to be deleted because I had the main character wake up and glance at her clock. Please reconsider.

Yours truly, ViciousHellhound


 * Your OC story subscribes to a number of Cliches ranging from the news report at the end of the story, the over description of the characters, and the characters tendency to spout off catchphrase-sounding lines. "Another gorgeous rose to remember me by."


 * Capitalization issues: ""Yeah mom. I'm up." She (she) grumbled", "I’ll be there in a second.” She (she) replied", "Get up.” She (she) whispered", etc. The first word after dialogue should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun or the start of a new sentence. Dialogue carrying over from intervening actions linked by a comma do not need to be capitalized as it is continuation of a sentence. "“There,” She said, licking the knife clean and putting it in her back pocket, “Another (another) gorgeous..."


 * Wording issues: there are a lot of redundancy issues/repetition involving character's names ("Her heart stopped as Autumn’s mischievous grin made its first reappearance since they’d met. Autumn...", "...Autumn Lawrence killed my family a week after she killed her own,” Sarah said venomously before she spat blood in Autumn’s face.", etc. As well as the protagonist's name: "They seemed a bit off to Sarah but her mom was forcing her to go. She thought Sarah needed...") Once confirming the subject's name, repeating it in the following lines can become redundant. (80+ times for Autumn and 125+ for Sarah) “Shhhh(comma missing) it(')s ok."


 * Story issues: This was where a majority of the issues were. The character's transformation needs a lot more build-up. "It wasn’t that she was naked; it was the brutal scars all over her body, the large rose tattooed on her right hip, the furry, black, catlike ears on the top of her head and the long, fluffy, black tail that seemed to be directly attached to her spine. Not only that but she was covered in blood, despite the bloody clothes at her feet, and there was blood dripping from her mouth." The antagonist's descent into madness really seems unjustified and there really isn't much tension to it.


 * All in all, this story feels more like a means of introducing your OC killer "Autumn Rose" than an attempt to tell a story involving the characters. The story should be happening around the characters, the story should not feel like it was engineered as a vehicle for them. I'd suggest look over ImGonnaBeThatGuy's very informative about OC/CPC characters and common pitfalls authors fall into when writing them. We have had an issue with OC/CPC stories in the past so our standards are much more stringent. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:30, July 18, 2015 (UTC)

Humane Nature
I understand my Creepy Pasta 'Humane Nature' could be deemed illiterate, although, its content had the upmost amount of effort poured into each and every line. I read over it again and again, attempting to refine what I could, only to awaken the next day to see my work removed. I can comprehend your standards, and they're fair, but what I can't fathom is the audacity one could bear to remove what I spent hours of my own little time to create. If my narrative was removed due its "lack of fright" I would urge that my story be read in its entirety, as apposed to glancing at the few sentences that happen upon your sight. For I have poured over its subject matter, plotted out its structure, wrote draft after draft on paper, and experimented with various expressions to compose sentences that hold the heaviest impact. I whole heartedly apologize for going ahead and reposting the Pasta, however I reposted the fully edited piece, so there is no chance of any bold errors (if that is the reason behind its removal). My point being: I apologize for attempting to write in that nature, and I wish only to have my efforts seen, even if seen as a monstrous failure. sincerely SAMMY&#39;s JAMMY WAMMY (talk) 05:44, July 20, 2015 (UTC)SAMMY's JAMMY WHAMMY


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards for numerous punctuation, wording, capitalization, and story issues.


 * Punctuation issues: Anonymous #1: “It’s our job to make sure people are frightened, to make sure they hear that whirring sound or feel that unsettling sense of fear; we’re here to make this world that bit more interesting,”, "Anonymous #2: “Me and my partner... My partner and I, we only see what’s wrong, and aim to correct,”, Anonymous #2: “not (Not) entirely, no reason, no, no,”, etc. Multiple lines of dialogue that are standalone should end in conclusive punctuation (periods, exclamation points, question marks.) as there's no proceeding action after. Punctuation missing from dialogue altogether: "...a very smelly boy”


 * Punctuation issues cont.: punctuation missing before dialogue: "Mr. Hooper’s voice booms over the machinery(punctuation missing “You did this Trent, just shut the fuck up, God damn it you don’t want to be involved", "kick(punctuation missing) “I bet I can make him piss his 'pants (apostrophe needed as you aren't shortening the word),” Apostrophes missing from contractions and possessive words: " their kid(')s a little shit,", "sons school photos" (done twice),


 * Wording issues: Redundancy issues "It was late, too late for a child to be out, yet I heard the Hooper’s child ride past my lounge-room window; his pushbike squeaking with all the years of neglected repair. It was midnight on a Thursday, all too late for 13 year old schoolboy;" (too late is used too many times), "...causing me to release a fart, causing me to release..." (causing me to release) "the authority (authorities)", "neighbor who’s (whose) years", "Their deaths wear (were) confirmed"


 * Capitalization: words improperly capitalized "My Bike...", "bike ‘Decaying (decaying)'", "“not (not) entirely,", etc.


 * Story issues: you shift perspectives without identifying the new perspective or including a break. This becomes difficult to follow as the audience is unsure of the story to begin with. How does this: "Anonymous #1: “It’s our job to make sure people are frightened, to make sure they hear that whirring sound or feel that unsettling sense of fear; we’re here to make this world that bit more interesting,” tie into the rest of the story? The ending "It’s sad to think I will never see the Hooper’s again, but I have a subtle notion that I will, perhaps in a dream." needs more build-up. Who is saying that line, and why will they be dreaming about that? The story feels rushed and the large punctuation, wording, grammatical, capitalization, and story issues do not help out your case much. I'm sorry, but this story isn't up to our quality standards so the appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:08, July 20, 2015 (UTC)

Dis and Harmony
Hello, I am the author of Dis and Harmony and I would like to appeal for the deletion of my poem as I have revised it according to quality standards and to the concerns of the admin and those in the workshop. I am not sure how to go about showing the revised product, as I don't belive its supposed to be posted in this spacing and I would like to show the finished product. If you can not find it, and I would like to know how I would go about doing that. Thank you for your consideration. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:473496

--Moltenpsyko (talk) 18:13, July 20, 2015 (UTC)


 * Your poem was deleted for not being up to quality standards and reviewing the revised portion, I'm afraid that it is still not up to standards for the site. Our requirements for poetry has become much more rigorous this past year due to the sudden influx of poetry and looking over your poem, I'm seeing a number of issues still present.


 * Punctuation: while most people think free verse operates outside of basic rules for poetry, there are in fact still important rules to follow. (Punctuation, rhythm/flow, etc.) Lines need proper punctuation (especially dialogue.) So lines like: "Slights of the mind had wrought upon my soul", "Every shadow leads to shudders, every sound leads to dread", "It’s her voice I’m truly afraid of", etc. all need punctuation. If it is continuing over another line, it should have a comma/semicolon and if it is the end of a sentence, it should have conclusive punctuation. Dialogue also needs to be properly punctuated: "“Please,” I beg, “let me sleep(period missing)”", "“Soon(punctuation missing)”" (6x), etc


 * Wording: the poem is told in present tense, but at times you shift from present tense: "She stops, for a moment, maybe two (period missing)" to "She would start (starts) playing again (period missing)" / "Her voice would become as my own heart as they continue along their melody". "Slights of the mind had (have) wrought upon my soul" (Slights is plural so you need to reflect this in your sentence.)


 * Rhythm/flow: some lines in your story flow nicely, but there is some awkward phrasing that trips up the rhythm in the verses. Try reading the poem aloud to see where these hiccups are. The poem still needs a lot of work so I'm afraid I am going to have to turn down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:42, July 20, 2015 (UTC)

Voices By the Lake
I do not understand as to why my story was deleted. The only reason I could think of is that it didn't completely make sense, but that is simply because it was based off of a disturbing nightmare I had one night and I was inspired to write about it on here. I proofread my pasta more than three times and there wasn't any spelling errors nor grammar mistakes that I knew of. I would be more than happy to add to the pasta if need be. I truly hope that you will take my pasta into consideration and allow me to re-upload it with improvements. Thank you.

Cohesive (talk) 17:43, July 21, 2015 (UTC) Cohesive


 * The story was deleted as it wasn't up to quality standards. (Which is also why this appeal is being denied)


 * Starting with the basics, dialogue should be spaced out so two speakers are never talking on the same line. "“How do you listen to the secrecy when you have water in your ear?” my mother inquires ... drain the water from my ear. “What are you talking about?”", "“I’ll send you to her,” a muffled voice instructs a ... conceivably scrutinizing me. “Why are you crying?” I ask, panicked."", etc.


 * Wording issues: "I couldn’t mutter a sound for I am now afraid to move; I don’t want to disturb the calm water, but how will I separate myself without disrupting the reticence?" (awkward phrasing), "The luminous flashing causes me to feel imperil", "My mother and stepfather now modified as black, obscure figures diving into the water simultaneously.", "I abruptly sense stone rocks being thrown at my chest and abdomen while my eyesight becomes completely empty all at once." Additionally "stone rocks" is redundant.


 * Story issues: the story feels very rushed and there really isn't much explanation or description. These lines: "“How do you listen to the secrecy when you have water in your ear?”", "“There is someone here to see you,”", "Listen closely,” without any explanation or adequate tie-in to the story almost come off as interchangeable. It doesn't make the story interesting to move from event to event without any sense of driving plot or overall arc. A little mystery is good, but being too vague in a story detracts from the overall quality. This lack of build up or tension was what led to it being marked for review in the first place and why I deleted the story and why I'm denying this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:24, July 21, 2015 (UTC)

The Dark Web
I recently wrote a new creepypasta called "The Dark Web"

I got some advice, and they said that the paragraph and grammar had some serius fails, so i rushed to correct them, it took 30 minutes to actually find every little wrong part, but when i hit publish, it said something about it conflicting whit another edit.

It returned to its original form, but this time, it was a mass text of wall. I tried to correct this as well, but i was not fast enough, the admins were though, deleting it.

I want to destroy my mistakes, and make some major edits to the story, corrrecting grammar and paragraph issues.

I really think that this request WILL be denied, but it is always worth a try, i would be thankful is the admins gave me a chance.

Also whoever got my edit to conflict, good job.

DBZGohuken (talk) 19:08, July 25, 2015 (UTC)


 * As I said on your talk page "That being said, even without the formatting issue, it (The Dark Web") still would have been deleted for punctuation, capitalization, grammar, wording, and story issues. Fixing the format was not the only problem ... Unfortunately you would need to do an appeal (see deletion message above) to reupload it, but doing so now would result in its denial. I would strongly suggest taking it to the writer's workshop for feedback."


 * Your story was deleted for being a wall of text with multiple misspellings, capitalization, grammatical, wording, and story errors. Since you haven't re-worked your story in any way to bring it up to our quality standards, your appeal is being denied. Please read our messages carefully next time. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:16, July 25, 2015 (UTC)

Masked
My Creepypasta "Masked" is apparently not up to standards. But I do not understand why. It is a perfectly normal scary story. There might have been a few spelling errors, but apart from that everything was alright. This does not make sense. Who decides what is up to standards? I believe that the first two or so sentences were read and if they do not seem bestseller material, then they are deleted for a first impression. At least specify why it wasn't up to standards. Tell me what I need to do better.

ChillTime (talk) 17:04, July 27, 2015 (UTC)


 * I can assure you that we don't delete stories just because they're not bestseller material. Looking over the story, I see numerous punctuation/spelling/capitalization issues, and a lot of the sentences were very choppy and awkward.  Also, please note that at the top of this page it says this is not a place to ask why your story was deleted, but for contesting deletions; if you want to attempt getting your story back on the site, you need to put it in the Writer's Workshop and make significant changes based on the feedback you get, and then make a deletion appeal with a link to the workshop thread.  I would also suggest reading over our Style Guide for help with some of the issues your story had.  Good luck.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 17:58, July 27, 2015 (UTC)

Closed Halls
Hello. I am not sure why you deleted my pasta. Is it from the content or from grammar? If it is grammar tell me my errors and please give me permission to upload it again, but with no mistakes. Thank you.

Fefoto (talk) 16:55, July 31, 2015 (UTC)


 * Your story had punctuation/capitalization/format issues, and it was plagued with shorty/choppy sentences as well as awkward/nonsensical phrasing. Please look over our Writing Advice pages, read our Style Guide, and consider using our Writer's Workshop for feedback.  Also, please read the appeal guidelines at the top of this page.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 18:04, July 31, 2015 (UTC)

It's Over was deleted for no apparent reason
I'm new here and I don't understand if I'm even doing this right. I don't understand why my story was deleted, forr there weren't any grammatical errors. I don't know how I'm supposed to sign so I'll use those lines.. Thatonegirl 700 (talk) 22:10, August 4, 2015 (UTC)

I don't think I was the one to delete it, but allow me to give you my opinion here.

So, the set up was actually nice. You actually took the time to give some background on the characters, the situation and the environment. Talking to a dead person is not something weird, either, it's believable. And finding she had suicided and hadn't noticed was actually interesting!

It all was a tad rushed, but overall was actually interesting and the concept was great.

And then you ruined it all by turning what you had set up into yet another generic HEY LETS KILL PEOPLE story. I literally banged my head against the desk here. You took what you had built and practically stapled something that just didn't have any business there. Also 'you're next'.

It's quite a shame because you had a promising start, and seeing it devolve in such a tired concept killed any will I could have about restoring it. So yep, your appeal is denied on the grounds of quality issues. --&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 22:18, August 4, 2015 (UTC)

Mental
This was a much better version of That Room. I fixed every issue that empyrealInvective pointed out, but still-deleted. Proof read it, grammar checked it, spell checked it, hell I even changed the ending because you pointed out it's not good.

Your explanation: "It seems OK. IT'S NOT. The plot is crappy" Are you kidding me??? Not only is that incredibly rude, but I also think that the opinion of the actual community matters, not just yours. So please let me upload it so I can at least see the comments, see what people think about it. PLEASE. CptHrki (talk) 12:57, August 6, 2015 (UTC)Cpt

You realize the crappy plot message is from March 21, 2013 and for a different story with the same title, right?

Next time take the time to have your facts right before using it as what's practically an accusation against the Administrators. Since I can't deny your appeal for being a crass jerk I suppose I'll go deeper into the story you uploaded.

It's pretty rushed. The reader doesn't have the time to think about the different plot points. There are only a couple parts where you took the time to actually show what was going on, the rest was like a grocery list, to use a common comparison.

Then...the ending. That's a bigger problem. Just...where did it come from? What's the relation of that mannequin with everything? Why the heck did it suddenly sprout teeth? Just...what did it have to do with the story? Until the ending you just gave it a couple sentences and neither of them could have foreshadowed the ending. It's like it was tacked there, it just doesn't fit.

So yep, I'm afraid I'll have to reject it. --&#34;You know why he&#39;s here? Why he&#39;s investigating the broken rules? He&#39;s not paid or anything. He likes it. He gets off on it&#34; (talk) 13:10, August 6, 2015 (UTC)

Mommy Liked to Play with Knives
I put up the story "Mommy Liked to Play with Knives" which was deleted only a few seconds after it was posted.

I think that I actually know why it was deleted. This is my first submission and so I am confused on how paragraphing looks and works in the editor. At first, I attempted to copy and paste my story only to realize that there was no paragraphing whatsoever, even though i thought I was working on the source tab.

It also probably looked like it was sloppy because it had no puntuation in it. But that's simply because...it's a poem! I tried to immediately  fix the paragraphs after I published the story, but the page was deleted right away. Because it was removed so quickly, I do not believe that my story was actually read.

Once I am able to upload it as a page, I would like to add it to the forum as well. I think that when the formatting is correct, the story will be worth being looked at because I have spent a lot of time working on it. I am a little bit confused on the source tab vs the visual tab, even through reading the help page, but I think that if I edit the paragraphing on the visual tab it should work...? I would like to be given the permission to reupload it however, so that it can be fixed.

Thank-You!


 * I actually looked at the format and figured it was a poem. That being said, poetry DOES in fact need punctuation (even if it is free verse). The story is written oddly, at times you write as if it were a child speaking and other times not: "That made Mommy really mad
 * So she chased me out the house until she fell before my feet"


 * Redundancy issues: "She doesn't breathe or move an inch “Mommy! Mommy! Why do your eyes not move an inch?”"


 * Story issues: the poem jumps around and never really takes the time needed to explain itself or build on the premise more than 'a child killed their parent and is now a killer (for no real explanation)". "Mommy used to wear a white dress But that was before she came to me" In short, the story really isn't up to QS. This guide is more in depth for why our standards on poetry are strict. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:57, August 7, 2015 (UTC)

Post Mortem
'''The pasta i wrote named Post Mortem was deleted for a reason i do not know of. If there were any typos it is supposed to look like a diary written by a teenager. I honestly have no idea why it was deleted off the page. '''


 * It was deleted for not being up to quality standards.


 * There were numerous capitalization issues with the pronoun "I" (I needs to be capitalized.) It seems off that a teenager would fail to capitalize like this. It also seems odd that the unknown person who uploaded the diary entries and writes at the beginning would also make the same mistakes. "kinda (Kinda) smeared out but i (I) think it says house)" \


 * Wording issues: there is a lot of redundancy issues and awkward wording. "Me and Katelyn", "I told Katelyn about the thing that i saw yesterday and we talked about almost all day.", "I went to the burned down house again to do some climbing when i found a weird patter on the floor. ", etc.


 * Punctuation issues: commas missing where a pause is indicated in sentence structure. (Before conjunctions.) "Katelyn's gone missing(./,) I really miss her(./,) i have only know (known) her for a few days but we had a special bond.". Apostrophes used incorrectly on plural nouns "bozo's", etc.


 * Story issues: "Please whoever finds this it's the black robed people there(punctuation missing) I hear them coming" Who in their final moments would keep writing in a journal and not try to escape. (Especially the fact that this takes place in modern times with cellphones and means of calling/finding help. "Me and Katelyn made up a joke that an evil clown kidnapped the officer and turned of (off) the power so everyone else gets kidnapped. After school i (I) saw some people walking in the woods with black robe (-) looking things. They were walking towards the direction of my house but i think it's just two weird bozo's but i still told a teacher." (Awkward phrasing. Additionally this needs a lot more explanation or build up to be effective. Why was the protagonist unnerved? How did the teacher respond? There are a lot of issues here and even if the grammatical issues were intentional, the story/plot still has problems as well as a lackluster ending.


 * Finally the framing device should be more fleshed out than two sentences. Why is the person posting the journal entries? Is he a friend, a relative? Use of a framing device correctly can build atmosphere or make a story more emotional/suspenseful. I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to turn down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:15, August 7, 2015 (UTC)

The Valued Customer
This was my first pasta, so I don't blame you if it had errors, I'm new to this.

I thought it was fine, but I'm not trying to be arrogant here. I just need to know my mistakes so I can improve.

Sincerely, CyclonewaveII (talk) 21:36, August 9, 2015 (UTC)CyclonewaveII


 * The story wasn't up to quality standards. Starting with the basics, dialogue should be spaced out so two speakers are never in the same paragraph. (This is common in almost all books.)


 * Punctuation issues: Book titles should either be in quotations or underlined. Commas missing before dialogue: "I told him the title of the book and he said "Ah, she's a very underrated author."


 * Story issues: here's what really sank your story. "...very valued reader of this library." I looked at the man and said, "Do you have any proof of that?"" Why would the protagonist ask for proof of membership from someone at a library? I know it's to advance the plot, but it's unrealistic. I don't go around asking for proof that people can shop at Sam's Club.


 * Story issues cont.: Then there's the lack of emotion/build-up in the story: "I said, "Do you know if a man with a notebook and a cowboy hat who visits here frequently?" She nodded and said, "Yes. His name was Robin Charles, a man who was killed by police after he was suspected of stalking a young girl and writing about her." (First off, why is the librarian so certain it's the same man? A cowboy hat isn't necessarily the most definable of features. Ignoring that, why is she so nonchalant about it? She merely nods and then recalls that a stalker who was killed by police that used to visit the library. ("Oh that's just the ghost that patronizes the library now that he's been murdered. Did he show you to the book you were looking for?" It dulls the ending you were hoping for. Finally, the story was really rushed and you didn't really devote anytime to building up the characters, atmosphere, or tension/unease of what you were going for. I'm sorry, but this story is not up to our quality standards and this appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:46, August 9, 2015 (UTC)

deleted!
can you please tell me why my story was deleted i checked there are no errors or anything so why is it you deleted my page i need to know so i can fix it. -shadowthekillerofficial


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. It was a massive wall of text, you fail to use quotations in dialogue, you don't use apostrophes in contractions, you don't capitalize a number of proper nouns (names, places, etc.), grammar (it's=it is, its=possession, there=indicatory, they're=they are, their=possession), etc. Almost every sentence of your story has an error of some sort that makes the story appear rushed/incomplete.


 * Most importantly, your OC story is very generic and uses a number of tropes (bullied teen, self-mutilation, catch-phrase). Please read this guide for a more in-depth critique of issues your story suffered from. The story is also very rushed and the fact that a lot of these errors are very visible makes me think it wasn't proof-read.I'm sorry, but there is a massive amount of issues with this story and I have no choice but to turn down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:38, August 12, 2015 (UTC)

I did what you said
I recently made a new story, and I made sure everything was spelled correctly, and everything else. It was called, Run away from Him. I also checed out your standards, and it met them. I thin that you made a mistae, or it was a glitch, or mistae. Will you please review it.


 * Your story, Run away from Him (Improperly capitalized) is eight sentences long, which would be fine if you were trying to write a micro pasta, but this feels more like a story you tried to shrink down and ended up sapping a majority of the creepiness/horror from it. I'm sorry but this story is incredibly rushed and lacks any attempt at suspense or build-up. Here are a few lines: "I had dreams, and I almost died 3 times. One of my dreams, I saw Satan, and he chased me." There is a lot you could have explained there. What were the dreams, how did the protagonist almost die? Etc.


 * Story issues cont.: There's little to no description here. It makes the story come off like it was written in a matter of minutes and hastily uploaded. Finally, the cliches/overused tropes "And you just might be next!" I'm sorry, but this isn't really a story as much as it is the footnotes for one. (Much like the other attempt of yours which was deleted.) I'm turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:26, August 12, 2015 (UTC)

I am Him
My story did meet your standards. It was called I am Him. There were no grammatical errors, and it was original.

It also wasn't a wall of text. I would like you to please bring it back.

Tylerchad (talk) 21:46, August 12, 2015 (UTC) Tylerchad


 * It was deleted for the exact same reasons as your story above, except now add on homophone (new/knew), grammar (your=possession, you're=you are) and redundancy issues (repetition of words like join.) Rushing out stories is not a good strategy and only leads to their deletion. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:50, August 12, 2015 (UTC)

Angel's Nest
It was deleted as far as I remember for not meeting with the quality standarts, a revised and fixed version appears on the Writer's Worshop under the name "Angel's nest FIXED" would appreciate if you took a look at it and reconsidered the deletion of my pasta

BloodySpghetti (talk) 18:37, August 14, 2015 (UTC)BloodySpghetti


 * Starting with the basics, your reformatted story has a lot of coding errors. Please use source mode when posting something. While it has no effect on overall quality, it is a pain to fix. Onto the story itself:


 * Punctuation issues: ""Alrighty, (Comma not needed) pal, tell me are you new to town? I've never seen you before(punctuation missing)"" Punctuation left outside of quotations: "said, "Yeah, I am".", "said, "You know son, we have some pretty weird stuff going on here, so be careful".", ""I'm good, let me finish the story", he said.". Punctuation missing from dialogue: ""Here's your beer, and welcome to Helsmoth(punctuation missing)"", "counter and (extra space needed) said, "Alright, I hope you're not some new age know it all skeptic"" Also know-it-all should be hyphenated, "I chuckled and said, "No, I'm not like that""


 * Punctuation issues cont.: apostrophes missing from contractions "dont" Punctuation missing before dialogue: "lungs 'Mommy, Daddy, Mira! there's an angel in my room'"Capitalization issues: you alternate between capitalizing angels and leaving it uncapitalized. If you are using it as a title (the Angel Raphael) it should be capitalized, if not, it shouldn't. Quotations/apostrophes missing from quoted dialogue: "she simply said, An angel did it""


 * Wording issues: "The bar tender (bartender) pour (poured) beer into huge class (glass) cup" Awkward wording: "The bar tender's face gave out a stern and serious (look?) as I asked". " 'I can't see... why can't I see, Mister(question mark)' meanwhile (Meanwhile) the other cops", "reaving her blind cataract like covered eyes crying".


 * Story issues: I mentioned this before, but why would the protagonist not open up with the ending line first? "Now I know exactly what was that gigantic winged thing (awkward wording) I saw on my way here." The protagonist has just seen a massive winged thing in the sky and goes into a bar and then makes small talk with a bartender? It seems off. It would be like a guy going to the doctor and talking about the weather before mentioning he was stabbed. You set it up as an important event, why would he not treat it as such in the story. I'm sorry, but this story needs work as SoPretentious mentioned in your first rendition and Christopher Michael Richardson pointed out grammatical issues in your revision. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 18:57, August 14, 2015 (UTC)

Nostalgic
My micropasta got deleted and I don't understand why. The grammar and spelling were fine. Freegee (talk) 03:27, August 15, 2015 (UTC)


 * Your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards (This is also why your appeal is being denied).


 * Redundancy issues: You use the phrase, "I remembered..." eight separate times. In another, longer story, this could be excused, but the fact your story is twelve sentences long and eight of those sentences are redundant weakens the overall story.


 * Story issues: A micro pasta is generally effective because it is a microcosm of horror that tells all it needs to in a few sentences. Your story feels more like a longer story you tried to shrink down into a micro pasta and forfeited a lot of the tension/horror in doing so. A majority of your story is nostalgia, which could be effective in a longer story, but in a shorter story, it gives it a feeling of "And then a skeleton popped out." due to a lack of reference and focus. I'm sorry, but this story is rushed, has redundancy issues, and really needs a lot of work/fleshing out so this appeal is being turned down. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 03:36, August 15, 2015 (UTC)

Strongloch Island
I have since revised the story: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:490535

Gabemcceldry (talk) 00:25, August 19, 2015 (UTC)


 * You corrected a lot of the punctuation (punctuation outside of quotations, random quotation marks inserted into ongoing dialogue, etc) issues present in the original draft. I would take note of this as it has been present in your other stories and was corrected.


 * I would also recommend that you avoid starting too many sentences with conjunctions (but, and, because) as it can give the story a choppy feel to it.


 * While there are still some story issues: the story could use a bit of a stronger opening with the job offer coming a little later to build up the protagonist. I also feel like you gloss over some opportunities to build up the condition of the mental hospital or the protagonist's captivity: ("Much time must have passed but I had no way of keeping track of it. But at some point the door to my padded cell sprang open and a police force appeared into view." It really feels like some more time should have been devoted to his time in the cell. Some plot points also feel a little on the rushed side. (The protagonist's rescue and subsequent viewing of the tapes.)


 * Those are mainly just advice for the story, but aren't mandatory for it to be accepted. All in all, I think the story is now up to this site's quality standards so I'm passing the appeal. Congratulations, feel free to upload the version from the Writer's Workshop onto the site at any time. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:59, August 19, 2015 (UTC)

My Dreamscape
From what I can understand, my page has been deleted for it being a journal, and from what I've read, journals are regarded as being too personal. However, I must point out that it isn't a real journal; I just added that detail to avoid making the storyteller look too omniscient. While I can understand the confusion, I contend that the deletion was a pure misunderstanding.

GMart5 (talk) 22:17, August 19, 2015 (UTC)


 * Your page was actually deleted for not being up to quality standards, which is also why this appeal is being denied. We accept journal entry stories, but they have to be up to QS. Starting with the minor stuff, dates should have suffixes (-st, -nd, -rd, -th,). A majority of the problem lies in the story itself, or lack thereof.


 * Wording issues: "the Father, the on (sic), and the Holy Spirit.", "I sometimes witnessed (implies sight, not hearing) the sounds of explosions near the hotel", "Without further a due, (adieu) "


 * Story issues: This is basically a dream journal with very little interconnectivity or plot progression. "I personally don't know if these dreams have any real significance." There isn't a cohesive or engaging plot here. If each section had its own plot and climax, this might work, but as it stands, this feels more like a dream journal you decided to publish as opposed to making a story. There really isn't anything to hook in the reader. (Recall any conversation about dreams and whether or not you were interested in hearing about someone else's dream. I'm sorry, but this story needs a complete overhaul/re-working because in its current form, there really isn't much here. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:32, August 19, 2015 (UTC)