Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27094307-20160220130517/@comment-27838637-20160229064809

It's well written but as SoPretentious stated; it's riddled with cliches. I like how it seems you have put alot of effort into the writing but unfortunately the overused theme makes it a little lacking. I will admit that the killing was incredibly violent but considering it stands out from the rest of the story so much, means that the rest of the story (other than the introduction) was a little bland and lacked intensity.

Unfortunately I think the story has too much effort put into it and too little impact on reading. I don't think it can ahve a place on the wiki according to the QS. Keep up the writing though!

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