Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5946174-20140410062541/@comment-13210154-20140415171745

It is an excellent story, a good read for those who love war stories (especially WWII). Though I do have to agree with Crinal, it's not really "creepy". The reason being, is that your amazing description of blood and fear are in no way out of place on a battlefield on the Western Front. You have a good command of the neccesary descriptors to be a superb writer on this site. My suggestion is to change your back drops to something where blood, gore, and fear are out of the ordinary, such as someone's home or a public park. I hoped this helped.