Talk:Sarah's Story/@comment-26030957-20150710234910

You are an incredible writer and a gifted story teller. I always enjoy reading your stories. The Wicker House is one of my favorite stories on the site so you know anything to do with the Arthur's Wake mythos is going to spark my interest.

It's great they way you are including references and links to your other stories. All of the references to A Bad Night were great, and added to the overall narrative, revealing back story as well as defining character. I appreciate you bringing Morgan Fontaine from A Figure in the Fog into the story, and I like that you are tying in other stories like Lights; however, I felt that the Micheal Landry character felt a little forced. He really contributed nothing to the story besides tying in The Soldier. In fact, the story might feel a little tighter and better constructed if you just took out the prologue and epilogue.

I know you are a dad, I am as well, and sure sometimes we feel unappreciated; but dude, I would hope if my possessed and battered body was left in a haunted house my wife would at least call the cops and an ambulance to see if they could revive me. And I'd hope my kids would at least mourn me a little. And if I catch my wife drinking coffee and flirtatiously smiling at some soldier while my body isn't even cold yet, you can bet I'm coming back from the grave to haunt that bitch!

It was a very entertaining and fun read (of course it was, look who wrote it) but it felt a little rushed and not as well thought out as I'd like.