Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24810508-20150526041100/@comment-26007602-20150530151040

First off, the second sentence is a run-on. Id separate it in two or use a semicolon.

So I'm curious as to what is supposed to be creepy here. Te narrator walks into a room and finds a doll that is hung from the ceiling. Is that it? Because that doesn't seem very unnerving at all. Most micropastas are supposed to be ambiguous and leave the reader with questions to fill in themselves, but this doesn't really do that. The doll is kind of there, but there is no indication that it's hostile or not. If you can explain the creepy intent, I can try and help further.