Talk:Daddy's Little Princess/@comment-25975226-20160118111502/@comment-25975226-20160127105750

Now that I've read about what you were attempting with the ending (Cormac McCarthy) it makes a whole lot more sense in the way it was written. I've never read anything by that person, but your description of his style is enough to know that you very much achieved this style of writing. It's a very ominous ending, and it does leave you with a certain feeling.

I've tried to get this story out of my mind ever since reading it but I don't think I can. It's one of those ones where you need to let it dwell for a few days and then you start to make up alternative endings in your head. "If he'd just taken her to the hospital she'd probably be better by now!" or "You don't need to kill more people! Find someone who can help you!" It has that connection with the characters you're so rarely able to find in a short story.

On a first read-through, it didn't impress me very much. After I let it dwell for a few days I can see what you've done here, even if you might not have intended it, and the story just gets so much better the more you think about it.