Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4656382-20180110035914/@comment-26399604-20180111134653

I'm a sucker for world-building stories or even ones that expand the universes through indirect stories. Although I am intrigued about the lore this piece has introduced, I think you're right: by itself, it's too short. It comes off more as a section of a chapter rather than a piece that hold its own. Now, if you were to include it with whatever large story you're building I think it'll fit fine then.

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+They named it after the Greek [god] of darkness due to how darkness just envelops its entire body.

+“What did you find[,] Lilith?” he asked.

+“We need to keep moving, pick [up] Erebus’ scent again[,] and end this.”