User blog comment:B1naryc0de/Hating on Jeff/@comment-24381191-20141221114621

Seriously, this again? Goddamn it, Jeff is a terrible story. The rest of this comment is from my comment on JtK itself and it was rude (sorry) so I'm gonna try to clear it up a little but there'll still be stuff that slips through the cracks:

1. Grammar. C'mon, you should've seen this coming. To those who defend it saying he's probably a kid or someone who speaks English as a second language, English is my third language and I could write better than this when I was ten (I'm fourteen and still speak better English).

2. Plot holes (in no particular order; I also haven't gotten all of them):

a) Bleach and alcohol don't make you a snowman.

b) If your hair got burnt, it would turn to ash and you'd become bald.

c) The parents just watch while Jeff kills three kids. Even after the bullies run out of bullets, they do nothing, which brings me to my next point:

d) Twelve-year olds have guns. I believe I've made my point.

e) Isn't this supposed to be a good neighborhood? People have guns, knives and horrible grammar.

f) The worst police force in history. Liu doesn't get a trial, no witness accounts and Randy and Co. need glasses as they can't tell Jeff and Liu apart.

g) Jeff's mom is like 'Fuck no!' when he gets ugly/insane. Ugsane! Moms love their kids no matter what.

h) His eyes would dry up, and he would bleed out through his smile.

i) Ugsane people can feel pain too.

j) His skin wouldn't be white and he would look like Freddy Krueger or something resembling that.

k) A lighter gets turned off when a person stops pressing the button, so you can't throw it at someone, unless it's a Zippo lighter which is expensive.

l) Why the hell do kids even have lighters? Do they smoke or something?

m) The little kid in the beginning talks like a wannabe author while everyone else in this story (including the author) has horrible English.

n) Bleach doesn't burn on contact, and the kind that does, is not household bleach, and illegal if you have it in your house.

<p style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">3. What am I missing? Oh, yeah, fangirls.

<p style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">4. How could I forget this one? Jeff the Killer. <--I mean just look at the name. It's horrible on so many levels, it's bland as hell. If you look at it as the title of the story, it's horrible, if you think it's something media gave him, it's horrible. News reporters usually come up with a decent nickname, at least. Like, I think it was Jeffery Dahmer who was called the 'Monster of ___' or the 'Cannibal of _____.'

<p style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">5. It's rushed. 'Nuff said.

<p style="color:rgb(212,212,213);">6. The bullies are cliched and every line that comes out of their mouths is cheesy and cliched.