Talk:The Puddle: Downpour

Pretty Decent!
Someone has played a good deal of D&D I would think. The "creature" of the story sounds remarkably like a Gelatinous Ooze, right down to it mimicing nothing more then a puddle of water. Still, not a bad story I'd say. Could use a bit more at the end, you have a decent build-up, and then nothing more then "Oh, we already know". Not to mention the entire time it kind of seems like the person whose view you're using is the main character and is partially responsible for discovering the creature, but at the end you completely revoke that stance. Starwulf99 03:53, May 1, 2012 (UTC)