Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180714064900/@comment-33937557-20180714113904

To go off the redundancy Jdeschene pointed out, I saw quite a bit in the second and third paragraphs. Small little pointer which you've probably already noticed but I thought I should try to be helpful.

The story is great, do make the edits suggested by these rather nice review comments above. I more than see potential here, I can practically reach out and touch it.

Not that this is possible.