Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27582895-20170130041347/@comment-27905100-20170130045252

This is an okay concept, but I'd like to see more story, as well as much less dry descriptions. Use powerful words, show us events in real time, rather than saying time passed, use good adjective, create a living, breathing scene.

That's all the advice I have for you now. Good luck with this.