Talk:Charles Robert Olevsky/@comment-29507836-20161011110034

I love the originality of the story! It is well described, and its length is perfect for the story. I also love the highlighted details that attribute to the google results as actually true. The grammar was good; I didn't really see any errors, and the same goes for the spelling. I also like the development, it really felt like he was real. The way you wrote it was nice, and I feel that the pace for quite a short story is good.

However, it didn't really explain anything more than what was told. I also don't feel that the scare factor is high enough. Also, I feel like you can explain more about what the NWDM was. Other than that, I don't really see any other flaws.

I rate this good story a solid 8/10.