Talk:I've Discovered a Horrifying Truth/@comment-43940019-20190926201230

Definitely got some Lovecraft vibes off of this. The moving consciousness reminded me of The Shadow out of Time, but of course deviated in a creative way. I'm a simple man that loves monsters, lol. You had quite a strong opening, but the very end had me scratching my head honestly. My recommendation would be to simply tell it like a story rather than trying to spread a message. Also some superfluous details could be removed. My teacher taught me to make a game out of it: To go back over the sentences and see how short you can make them, whilst still retaining each idea you want to convey.

stay trve \m/