Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36358996-20180728160817/@comment-9041013-20180728204046

There's a bunch of technical issues all over the story, as it was mentioned before.

Storywise now, how about going for starting with the sea scenario, just make sure to mention how the woman turns into a mermaid and how it is a dream kind of scenario. After the dream scenario ends horribly, write about a period of time in this relationship, starting with the time during which it works and slowly build up to it's break apart, conclude this by having your main character overdose or try suicide by consumption of something, be it pills, alcohol, poison.

And close it off with perhaps a still delirious main character waking up in the hospital to think he was haunted by the mermaid monster only to be told that he attempted suicide.

Take your time writing this whole story, it doesn't have to be finished in a couple of hours, its okay if you're taking your time.

That's all I have for now.