Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28299494-20170403020638/@comment-27905100-20170404022118

Creepypastalover32 wrote: I'm aware I'm a bad writter because I'm only 14, so I don't exacly know what I do wrong even when i think im doing something right This really got me going for some reason.

I'm maybe two years older than you... maybe.

Don't use age as an excuse. ever.

That's all I'm going to say.

Your story is rushed. Take it slow. We have no idea what anyone looked like, any personality anyone has, or even what the painting looked like (sort of is not good enough). Try rewriting a story to include everything you want. Something might just click. It worked for me, anyway.

idfk how to help you, honestly. I'm just gonna say rewrite it, because it worked for me, which means it at least worked for someone.