Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20180619073009/@comment-5733573-20180619221508

I like it. It's well-executed, and so there are only a few things I think it could still use:

- The ending comes kind of out of nowhere. I feel like you were going for the surprise factor by making the main character Jewish after all this time. I have mixed feelings about this: part of me likes holding the surprise for the end, and another part feels like it should have been teased more from the start. Something about holding it until the end feels like a "trick" to me, I will say. Both, I think, could be done effectively, so I guess this one is your call.

- There are some punctuation and formatting errors that need to be looked at, but these can be solved with a good proofread. For instance, "How dare you waste the Reich's ammunition" should be a question.

Overall, it was quite strong, and I liked the slipping in and out of visions and dreams. Good stuff.