Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181128205448/@comment-9041013-20181129000758

I think this was like a slasher movie, it was just long and drawn out, I know something's about to go down, but it just doesn't for the longest time. People get picked out by unnaturally capable "villains" out of my sight... It's really not appealing to me at this point.

Also the beasts are way too overpowered, I don't care if they tie into the Wyrm-verse but this is just ridiculous... they are untouchable during the day cause you can't find them and they are untouchable during the night cause darkness makes them gods in the form of bear-dogs.

Cryptozoology does not attempt to be about fantasy, rather about sci-fi that ties in with local folklore. It's just way too much. Super intelligent beasts who are also magically unstoppable... what's the point of the story if I know from the beginning of the turning point the dude dies for sure?

On top of that, I've told you this already - predators wouldn't mind a reduction in competition, so since you didn't clearly tell us that the wolves killed by the boys are part of this group, they shouldn't go after the boys.

Also, their method of hunting is dumb as fuck, if you aim for the head, you pounce from behind, that's what large cats do... usually nature does this thing where unrelated species come up with similar tactics for hunting specific types of pray, like specific can opening in corpses.

The Waheela are said to travel in small groups of 2-3 members.

Tone down on the mundain crap, tone down the slasher style killings and dumb characters for the sake of making a plot work... it's just ehhh and tone down on the unstoppable monsters, if there's not even a slightest hint of false hope, it's not worth the investment; I know he's dead.

You finished with "outside the doo"