Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24331106-20140325021100/@comment-17758905-20140331005424

Well, this gets really redundant at points. You take a majority of a paragraph describing what bring thrill to a regil when they kill. The information is stretched out for too long, and easily could've been shortened.

Also, mroe could've been explained about this human. I'm assuming Donald was this human, and the first few paragraphs are what he wrote in the journal that the regil read. Speaking of which, how does a regil know how to read? Anywho, you could've gotten more in depth with this Donald person, such as how he met his first regil.

Speaking of the regils, why do they like to kill humans? Because they do? That's not the best excuse ever. It's really just cliche.

Also, don't reference Slenderman, just don't. It's like mentioning creepypasta in your creepypasta.