Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26021864-20151127043331/@comment-24101790-20151127044719

I'd suggest looking over this advice section onmicro pastas as there are quite a bit of issues here.

There are a number of awkward wording issues: "I wish to (for) him to be captured soon,", "I hope his neighbors can soon feel (sic) the stench", "I even hope I get the decomposition (sic)", and "get too closer (sic) to my corpse." This could use quite a bit of proof-reading.

This really feels like it needs to be fleshed out a lot more to be effective. Right now, this feels more like a premise than a complete story.