Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24714617-20140512023110/@comment-24714617-20140515133255

I didn't like the ending too but at least, this pasta wasn't a complete disaster like the last one. And Booboo is right, the narrator is a guardian angel/spirit. I wished to left that open to interpretation, but the word "demon" gave it away. As for detail, I made a point of making the pasta as short as possible, so I'd be difficult to add more but I'll try anyway as well as revising the grammar.

The original ending would have the boy being thrown into a pool by his siblings and drowning, which would seem more plausible and subtle (given that the pasta implies that this kind of demonic possession happens all the time, so the parents would think that the children are innocent) but then some people would be all like "HURR DURR IT'S HOW BEN CAME TO BE!one1!"