Talk:John's Story/@comment-5733573-20180919034100

It's not a bad story. The encounter with the two men in John's room seems chillingly plausible. However, where it takes a turn for the ridiculous is when the men show up at the narrator's house. Is it the worst thing I've read? No, but it's also not the best. For your next story, try to stay aware of what's just enough and what might be too much.

There were a lot of run-on sentences here before I fixed them. Please brush up on sentence structure for your next story and always proofread each draft. This will really help a lot.