Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20190730183504/@comment-35911608-20190730211532

Helel ben Shahaar wrote: It's a decent enough story. Kinda lacking, but the twist saves it. I honestly didn't see it coming, and I had to reread it to get it. Thanks. I'm going to rework it a bit. The grocery part goes on too long for me personally, and I need to make the man across the road do some more things that could come off as threatening.