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Hello readers! This is the first part to a creepypasta I worked on. It's kind of long, but I really enjoyed writing it. Tell me what you think of the first part, and I'll post the proceeding part next week. Thank you, and please provide feedback.

Daniel Gomez was with his girlfriend, Lisa, when he received the phone call. They were in Lisa’s living room, sitting on her long, white, comfortable couch, watching TV while cuddling with one another. They had the lights off, and pillows over their legs. That’s just how they felt comfortable when with each other.

Daniel pulled his right arm off that was wrapped around Lisa’s waist, and gestured to his girlfriend to give him one minute. “Damn, someone’s calling my phone. Who the hell is it? I told my dad I was going to be home late,” Danny said, wanting nothing more than to just be relaxing. He barely spent any time with Lisa, since being in the varsity team in wrestling can be a struggle with your social life. You spend most of the time practicing and going to matches and tournaments. Usually Daniel had Saturday practices, but that day it was canceled, so he decided to spend some time with Lisa.

“Probably your friends. They’re always trying to spend time with you, but you use it all on me sometimes,” Lisa said, and smiled, her white teeth in perfect display. Danny fell in love with her hair instantly the first time he saw her the beginning of freshmen year in high school. Black, long, wavy hair that stretches down all the way to the middle of her back. When the sun aims at that hair, it transformed to a precious looking light-brown. “Don’t you feel bad you don’t spend time with them?”

“Yeah, let me tell you,” Daniel said, still fishing for his phone in his right pocket. He was wearing jeans, so he found it difficult to dig in there. “We mostly just do stupid, useless things. Besides, most of my friends are from practice, and I see their ugly faces all the time. And also, I miss you.”

“Aww, I miss you too,” Lisa said, and reached to give Danny a kiss. She placed it on his lips, and he rendered her one back on her cheeks, while finally getting the phone out of his damn pocket.

The call came from no one he knew, it wasn’t any of his added contacts. No, instead it was a number from Illinois. That’s weird, Danny thought. I live in New Jersey.

“Who is it,” Lisa asked, noticing her lover’s questioning gaze at his phone. Daniel shrugged, not knowing either, and slid his thumb to the right to answer the phone, the way you can do that with all new IPhones.

“Hello?” Daniel said commonly. No response. “Hello?” Daniel tried again, still the same thing. Just silence. “Well fuck you then,” Daniel finally said, and hanged up.

“Damn” Lisa said. “You sound pissed.”

“Well I am a bit,” Daniel said, trying to put back his phone in his pocket. “I’m tired of these assholes always trying to prank ca-“His phone rang again, the same tune playing once more.

“Hello!” There was a moment of complete silence, and before Daniel could scream onto his phone again, he heard a voice come out of it.

“Hello there, Daniel Gomez,” The voice said inside the phone, sounding inhuman. It was too deep to be the voice of any person. The person on the other line must be using a device to alter his or her voice. “You know me, but maybe you don’t remember me. But I know you. I know you perfectly well. I also know your girlfriend, Lisa. Say hi to her for me.”

Daniel just sat there on the couch, his mouth slightly open, looking pale. Who is this guy? Lisa noticed her boyfriend’s face grow gloomy, and before she could say anything, he gestured her once more to keep quiet. After a moment of thinking about it, Danny found this stupid. It’s obviously a prank call.

“Alright listen here, buddy,” Daniel started, standing up abruptly, getting heated. “I don’t know who you are and what you want, but you better stop fucking calling this-“

“At this moment you are inside Lisa’s home, to be more specific, in her living room,” the voice’s words echoed inside Daniel’s ear. He stood there, not moving a single cell in his body. “You’re standing up, looking like you saw a ghost right now. Your girlfriend is sitting on the couch you guys were just laying on, cuddling like a couple of horny bunnies. Now do you think this is a game? Or am I just another ‘asshole prank caller?’ Well, now that I have your attention, listen closely. I want, no I need you to do something for me, and if you don’t complete this task, I will do something terrible to you. Are you listening?”

“Ye- Yes,” Daniel said, his throat dry.

“Honey what’s wron-“Lisa started.

“Give me one minute, dammit!” Daniel practically screamed at his girlfriend, blocking the microphone of his cell, not wanting the other person on the other line to hear. What’s the use? He already knows where we are, and what we were doing. Thank goodness Lisa’s parents weren’t here. She stood looking at him, her eyes wide from shock and fear. Daniel silently whispered “I’m sorry,” to Lisa. Daniel placed the cellphone back to his right ear.

“You’re going to receive a message from a different phone number. That message is going to contain an address. Now listen carefully because this is exactly what I want you to do. In one week from today, I want Lisa and you to arrive at that address, by yourselves, at eleven p.m. You’ll receive the address the morning of next Saturday. Do not bring anything else, but yourselves. I want no cell phone, wallets, keys, nothing. And if you even think about bringing a weapon, Lisa’s head is going to be blown off, and I’ll make sure you watch it do so. During this week, however, I’m going to be calling you occasionally, check up on you, and make sure you aren’t doing anything stupid, you know like warning the cops about what you are listening to. Again, if you do that, before you even have time to tell the operator about us, she will be dead. So be a good wrestler, and listen to your coach. Do I make myself clear?”

Daniel paused for a couple of seconds, taking in everything the man, or whoever it was, just said. What the fuck is going on? “Y- yes, I heard what you said, and I know what you want. But I swear to god if you lay one hand on Li-“

“What are you going to do? Kill me? Please, Danny boy, you’re smarter than that right? You don’t even know who I am. But I know exactly what you’re doing. Sit on the couch for a second, boy, I want to show you something. Something, so that you know I am not playing games.”

Danny reluctantly sat down.

“Stare at the TV that’s hanging in front of you guys, I want to show you a magic trick.”

Danny raised his eyes to glance at the TV. It showed a blank screen, it was off. Lisa and Daniel were spending the time just hugging and talking, and really didn’t want to watch the idiot box for once. It was all a peaceful and loving day, until this happened.

“I’m going to turn it on, and I’ll even describe what you guys are watching.”

“Impossible,” Daniel said. But before long, the TV flashed on in bright colors without him or Lisa to turn it on. The remote was nowhere to be seen. The channel that was on was Cartoon Network, and the show being displayed was Regular Show. When the TV turned on, Lisa gasped in surprise, and was about to ask Daniel what was going on, but she knew better. Give him one minute.

“Right now,” the voice said. “You’re watching Cartoon Network, a pretty stupid choice of channel to watch in my opinion, and you’re watching that dumb show they always put on, Regular Show. Right now, the blue bird and the retarded raccoon, what’s his name, Rigby? Yeah Rigby, they’re in their living room, playing video games. Now watch this.”

The channel in the TV changed, and now showed Disney Channel. This time the show being watched was Good Luck Charlie, a new show Daniel sometimes watched when his baby brother was around. It never quite caught the boy’s attention, although he did like Regular Show and was offended when the person on the phone said it was dumb.

“Now you’re watching Disney Channel while seeing that show, I think it’s called Good Luck Charlie? Sounds right. The baby Charlie is with her sister and dad, and the dad is in his plumber or exterminator uniform. Imaging watching that baby’s head blown off? Image me cutting it into bits of pieces with my knife. Do you like that thought, Danny boy? I like putting dirty thoughts like that into your mind. Like how I’m going to blow of Lisa’s he-“

“That’s enough!” Daniel yelled at his phone, his fist in a tight clutch, his knuckles glowing white.

“I had my fun here. Well, now you know what I am capable of, and know I have power over you. Be at that address in a week, and if you’re not, well…..you know.” The phone call ended with a laugh sounding sardonic and wicked through the end of the beep.

Daniel slowly put down his phone from his ear, and was thinking of throwing the thing across the room. Better yet, he was thinking of completely destroying it. How does he know everything? Who is this guy? Who is this-

Daniel’s train of thought was cut short from a hand placed on his shoulder. Lisa’s hand. He turned his head to look at her, and saw the concern and fear in her eyes, those beautiful eyes he had seen so many times. Daniel couldn’t see, but his face was beyond pale. He appeared transparent.

“Danny,” Lisa said, her own voice sounding weak. “What’s the matter? Talk to me. You look like a ghost.”

Daniel explained everything to his girlfriend, minus the part where the person said he or she was imaging doing that thing to little Charlie. What a sick bastard. Lisa’s face soon grew the same color as her boyfriend.

“Wait, what do you mean he wants us to go to that address, what for?” Lisa asked. The time was three in the afternoon, and in the outside world things appeared normal. It was a chilly day in December, three days after Christmas. Out where Lisa and Daniel live, Jersey City, the streets were rushed with cars going their own direction. Inside Lisa’s house, however, was terror rising by the second.

“I don’t know why he wants us to go there, but he really does wants us to be there,” Daniel said. He noticed his body couldn’t stop shaking, He was scared straight. “What should we do? If we go to the police, he said he’ll kill you before I even tell the operator what’s going on. He also has an eye on your house right now, he’s probably hearing us this minute.” Daniel and Lisa both began peeking around her living room, and getting chills sprinting down their spines, making their bones frozen solid by the thought of being watched.

“Daniel,” Lisa said, and he could see the shine in her eyes. She was about to cry. “I’m scared.”

Danny pulled his girlfriend closer to himself, and began hugging her as Lisa sobbed on his shoulder. He patted her back while stroking her long, beautiful hair. He wanted nothing more to stay at that moment forever, because in her arms, fear wasn’t such a reality, more of a distant memory trying to chase him down again but can’t quite reach him. Still, the horror of everything was at his tail, and was just inches away from biting his behind.

“Me too, baby” Daniel said, still hugging Lisa. “I’m scared too.”

They both decided there was nothing they could do, so they both remained shut about the whole situation. Thankfully, they were in the middle of Christmas vacation, so they didn’t have to face school, and be judge on how sleepy and white they looked. Sleep and dreams wasn’t something that existed with them anymore. Every night they pondered about the terror of things that may happen, and thanks to technology they were able to text on most of these nights. At least they were scared together, which wasn’t so bad, right?

But it still was. There were be nights were Daniel would stare at his ceiling in his room, the light’s off and not a single noise to be heard, and his thoughts would consume him. He would think about someone breaking into Lisa’s house, and doing stuff to her. Killing her, raping her, and Daniel would start to feel sick, and his stomach would begin to twist and turn. His anger would also then rise, and he’ll have the urge to hit something, anything to mitigate his rush of rage.

The person said that he or she would be calling Daniel, to check up on him and see if he’s not doing anything dumb. Danny didn’t believe this at first, until three days after that horrific Saturday.

Danny was having another one of those nights where he would stir and turn in his bed, his head feeling heavy, as if his skull was made out of metal. His phone was in his pocket of his sweats since he was texting Lisa throughout the whole night. It was around two forty a.m. when Danny’s phone began vibrating in his pants.

He thought immediately that something was happening to Lisa, or something happened to her, and viciously began digging into his sweats, trying desperately to take out his phone. When he saw the caller ID, however, his heart dropped all the way to China. It was a caller from Illinois, but a different number entirely. Daniel didn’t know he was holding his breath until he answered the phone, then he tried to breath normally. Try wasn’t a good word, he forced himself to breath like a normal person.

“He- hello?” Daniel said very low, not wanting his parents to hear him.

“Hi, I just wanted to check on my best friend,” it was the same voice from Saturday. “Hope I am not bothering you or anything, but I noticed you can’t sleep. You keep turning on your goddamn bed, what’s wrong, man? Got something on your mind? Something you want to let out?

Daniel laid there, only listening.

“Well, I’m sure it’s nothing that bad. Just try taking Nyquil, or something that would help. Anyways, I can’t help but notice you have a window in your room and the drawers are pulled down. You mind letting them up for a bit. Don’t you want to look at the moon for a bit?”

Daniel thought about it for a second, and then got out of his bed. The floor was cold, but he could care less, he was just going to his window which was not that long of a trip.

When he arrived in front of his window, he realized how tired he was. His eyes felt dense and weak, and his whole head began shaking. Daniel reached out his hand, and pulled down the drawer so it would shoot up as it always did. There, he saw the moonlight cast down all over the other houses in his neighborhood, and the shining stars circling around the moon as if it was wearing a belt. Danny found this sighting pleasant.

One sighting he didn’t quite find so well to look at was that there appeared to be a figure on top of a roof on the house a couple of homes away from his. The figure stood up, and looked tall, and like the shape of a human. All you could see of this figure was darkness, it seemed as if shadows covered the person completely. The figure began to wave, one arm going back and forth like a clock.

“I just wanted to say hello, check up on you,” the voice said in Danny’s ear, him not realizing he was still holding the phone close to his ear. “Look, you want to see something cool?”

The figure laid back down on the roof, and picked up something next to him, and began pointing the thing he grabbed directly at the window Daniel was using to stare outside. Soon, a red dot manifested itself on the window, and Danny could see the annoying light, pointed near his head.

“I have a sniper pointed right at your forehead, buddy. Ain’t that something pleasant to see? You like knowing that I could simply blow off your brains right now? Doesn’t Lisa live near? Imagine if I pointed this light at her head, maybe her heart, you think she’ll like that?”

“Please,” Daniel said quietly and as gently as he could, trying not to lose his cool. “Is that all for tonight?”

“I guess so, it was nice chatting with you. Chao. Hope you sleep well. I know I will.”

That night, Daniel barley shut his eyes.

There was another time where Daniel received a called from the mysterious figure. It was during one Thursday morning, two days after the late at night phone call, while eating breakfast with his little brother, James. The two boys were next to each other while eating cereal, Honey Nut Cheerios. James was only six years old, and he laughed with his brother while they ate their food.

At the back of Danny’s mind, he kept on reminding himself of the terror he was placed in. He left his phone inside his pocket every damn second from then on, anticipating a call every now and then. Sometimes, the paranoia killed the boy, and he would just go crazy at the thought of someone calling him, sending chills down his spine again. Even laughing with his brother right now, he knew he could never be happy as long as that damn person kept calling.

Daniel’s phone vibrated in his pocket.

He was in the middle of putting cereal in his mouth when it happened. He dropped the spoon instantly, creating a splash in his bowl, and making the milk jump in high waves, and land on the table he was eating on. Usually a mess like this would concern Danny, but not today. He kept his mouth open, scared and wondering who it was. After a moment hesitation, he fished into his pocket, took out his phone, and saw who was calling him.

It was a number from Illinois.

Without thinking about it, Daniel answer, “Hello? What’s up? How can I help you?”

“You sound too enthusiastic today in the morning, buddy,” the voice said, his or her words vibrating in Daniel’s ear. “Trying to make me believe you’re actually okay? I can read through your lies and fear, Mr. Gomez.”

“Well,” Danny said, and gulp a sour saliva. “That’s unfortunate.”

“It really is,” the voice said. “It really damn well is. It sucks you can’t share the happiness I feel right now, because this is making me laugh my fucking ass off. Don’t you find your misery funny? I sure do. You should laugh with me.”

Daniel didn’t laugh.

“Oh well, it was worth a shot. Well, tell your brother that your friend said hi, and that I like his racecar sheets, especially his Lighting McQueen pillow. Don’t tell him this, but imagine me suffocating him with that pillow?” The call ended like that. Daniel doesn’t even remember eating cereal. He just remembered going into his room, and trying desperately not to cry.

But that, of course, failed completely.

Throughout Thursday and Friday, Daniel grew pissed. It wasn’t obvious anger, the boy kept it in his mind. He knew he was going to face this person the up and coming Saturday, and he or she wants Lisa to come. This person has some sort of fascination with her, which made Danny conclude to the fact that it may be a male, but the question was who exactly? And why now? Has this person been stalking them since sophomore year, when they first started to go out? Or does it go further than that? Why Lisa dammit? And why him? Why would a normal person like Daniel, who does sports, goes to school and tries his best, and who is at most a B student, and then goes home and play video games, watches dumb videos on YouTube and thinks about his girlfriend, why out of all the people in the world, this person chose Daniel? He was just a normal person, more than that, he was a good kid. Never bothered much, and kept to himself in classes he didn’t know anybody in. Same goes for Lisa. Sure she was more involved in school being in four clubs in their high school, but other than that, she was exactly the same as Daniel. I think that is what bothered Daniel the whole time. Why them? What have they done to deserve this type of torture, this type of paranoia, this type of insomnia?

With all of this, Daniel grew pissed! His anger mixed in with his crankiness of not being able to sleep ate him away, and soon he would be flipping tables and grunting at his family members inside his home. He wondered how Lisa was doing, and on a Friday morning, sent her a message, saying if she could hang out that day. She said sure, and said she could be with him around the afternoon. He said that’s fine, and to be ready to talk about “certain things.”

She just responded with an “Okay…..”

The rest of that Friday morning, Daniel spent his time playing his Xbox, and trying to get his mind out of the terror and anger his heart was racing around with.

It wasn’t until he was starting to get ready to head towards Lisa’s house when his phone rang a small tune, indicating he received a message. He thought it would be Lisa, and actually grew a smile. That smile soon faded like it never existed, when he saw it was from an unknown number.

He opened the message, and just read the top of the text. Here’s the place, don’t forget. 11 p.m. Below that message, it simply said, Boulevard East, Weehawken, New Jersey. Face in front of the Empire State Building.

Daniel recognized Boulevard East, he had been there plenty of times with his parents. He always found the place beautiful and a nice setting to walk around during a warm summer day or night. This time he was going in the freezing winter night with his girlfriend, which he also didn’t quite mind since his family had celebrated New Years while in Boulevard East.

When he arrived at Lisa’ home that afternoon, Daniel told her about the address they had to go to.

“That’s a little far from where we live, but we can make it,” Lisa said, her eyes containing dark, purple saggy bags.

“Yeah, we have to leave pretty early, maybe around ten to get there,” Danny said, his eyes appearing the same way as his girlfriend, except it kind of looked pretty on Lisa. With Daniel, he appeared as a zombie. “How…..have you been?”

“Not that great, as you should know. After all those nights we spend texting each other, you should know I don’t get any sleep.” After a few seconds. “Danny, I’m scared.”

“I’m scared too, baby.” Danny proceeds to bring his girlfriend close, and give her a warm and relaxing hug. Having someone to go through this with was much, I repeat much better, Daniel thought. They were in Lisa’s kitchen. Her mom was in her bedroom, most likely watching TV, enjoying her Friday. “We’ll get through this, together.”

“I hope so, Dan,” Lisa said while not wanting to let go of her boyfriend. It had been almost a full week since she had last seen Danny, and wanted nothing more than to spend her last normal day with him. After this, who knows what was going to happen? “I hope we do get through this.”

That afternoon, they spent the whole time watching TV while cuddling next to each other. Despite everything, they were able to have a calming and loving day, and even managed to both take a nap on each other. At night, Daniel left Lisa’s home, giving her one last huge hug and a big kiss in her cheek, and went to his own house.

Surprisingly, they slept early and well that night, not having a single nightmare. And not even being bothered by the mysterious person the whole day.

The next day finally arrived, and Daniel woke up with a dense and unbearable depression. Danny barley ate his breakfast, and spent most of the day moping around his home, trying to keep himself distracted. While texting Lisa, she had the same schedule going on herself. She spent most of her time sitting on the couch where they both hanged out, and wished he was there, to have something to grab or cry with. She had to be strong, however, she knew that.

Daniel knew that too, but it was so much easier to stay sad and angry instead of determine to find out who this asshole is. His rage helped with his determination, but most of the afternoon, he just decided to watch Netflix, get his mind off of business.

Around nine thirty that night, he told his parents he was going out with Lisa tonight, and to not wait up on him. Danny told them he was most likely going to sleep over. He had only done that three times, so he figured this lie wasn’t as detectable. Besides, Daniel and Lisa were eighteen and practically adults. Fortunately, his parents nodded their heads, and let him go. The same thing happened as well, instead Lisa told her mother she was going to sleep over another girl’s house. She agreed, but made sure to call her the next day.

Lisa and Daniel met up half way between their houses. They gave faint smiles to one another, and approach each other with hugs, tears on the verge of falling off of Lisa’s eyes. Danny felt those tears arrive right when he saw Lisa, but pushed them away immediately.

They didn’t talk much, just held hands and wanted to walk all the way to Boulevard East. It really didn’t stay far, and they arrived in forty-five minutes or less. It was currently ten thirty, and they had time to spare.

They waited on the cliff where if you looked out beyond, you could see the vast and prodigious Hudson River, where a plane once crashed there. It looked dark blue and mystical in the night, the easy waves flowing by with the piercing wind outside in this December night. Pass the river, you saw all of New York. There were dozens of sightings of the plentiful of buildings they had, and right smack in the middle was the Empire State Building, the tallest of them all. It stood humongous with a point at the top. The billions of small lights of the buildings shined on both Lisa and Daniel’s eyes, it really was the city that never sleeps. The luminous moon hovered on top of both states like a UFO, appearing grey and fully glowing.

There were no stars that night.

Daniel checked the time on his watch he had to bring since he couldn’t take his cell, ten fifty seven. Only three more minutes remaining. “Well….it’s almost time. What should we do if we see someone?”

“I don’t know,” Lisa said with a chill in her voice. Her lips appeared slightly blue instead of her usual luscious red. “Should we run? Jump him?”

“I say we run and scream. There are many houses near us, they would be alarmed and soon we’ll be saved.” Lisa only nodded in returned. Daniel checked his watch. Ten fifty nine. His heart began to beat faster, and as each second ticked by, it grew rapid in pace. He glanced over at Lisa, and her face started to gain back its color, but out of fear. Her eyes widened by the idea that something, very soon in just a couple of seconds, was going to happen. Danny checked his watch again, only twenty seconds until eleven. Oh god I feel like I’m going to puke, Danny thought. He wanted to crouch down and let everything out, but his eyes stayed locked on his watch, and he witnessed how the second hand rises each second, coming near the number 12. Only ten seconds left. His heart literally felt like it was going to plunge out of his lungs and chest. Despite the freezing night, sweat began trickling down his forehead all the way to his lips. Five more seconds. Four. Three. Tw-

Before the hand made it to 12, something was shot at Daniel’s neck that sent him to sleep. The last thing he saw was someone putting a black bag over Lisa’s head. 