Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25114042-20140702033104/@comment-25558572-20140702052706

Try to make the death gunshot. Most murderers use guns.

And honestly, I would advise scrapping this plot altogether. :c It's just not impressive, and might be thought of as deletion-worthy by the admins even if you type in perfect grammar. You should try to come up with a plot- what you have here is not a plot, it's an event and a reaction. What killed the boy's mother, and why and how did it do it? What happened to the boy afterwards?

Asking yourself questions like this are a VERY good way of making better stories. If you have an answer for every question someone might ask your story, it will be a good one.

Read my blog Torture Porn- What It Is and How To Avoid It for some relevant advice.