User blog comment:Zumokiworks335/CREEPYPASTA WIKI IS FOR PRO'S/@comment-27859657-20160713181246/@comment-25024572-20160713192052

Glad you had a bit of a laugh (comedy is my specialty, after all). Listen, while putting a bit of yourself into the character(s) you write isn't a bad idea, doing it to the extent of self insertion is. It usually comes across as a bit narcissistic, and doesn't exactly make for the best characters. Yes, have some of yourself in these characters, but also make sure they are different from you. Make sure they're flawed and, well, aren't you.

Also, if the beginning part is true, then this comes across as a bit of a vent than a story. Just saying.

And if you wanted your character to have their sanity intact, why have him in a mental institution? Seems a weird direction to go. Plus it's pretty hard to be a serial killer and be sane at the same time.

I'm not saying that you should give up on your idea, but you should heavily, HEAVILY edit it. Make it less about you, and more about the main character. And have a bit less cliche.

Also, be sure to use Microsoft Word, and the Writer's Workshop. Both of those will iron out any typos you have, and the Writer's Workshop will, most likely, help iron out any flaws in your story.