Talk:Another Senseless Ritual/@comment-5733573-20180616165748

I liked this a lot. The plotting and design of the ritual are very well done. I appreciated that, even when it became clear what we were in for, it was never dull or too predictable. On top of that, he narrator's voice and the humor and irony sprinkled throughout make it a very enjoyable read.

As far as criticism, I suggest making another proofreading pass. There are some places where a stray word got left in and it's clearly unintentional, but there are also some places where the sentence structure is off or a word seems to have been used incorrectly. Just give it a careful look over and I suspect these things will iron themselves out.

Overall, a very stong and fresh ritual pasta that reminds me of the best of the Holders series. Nice work!