Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26242189-20170811025843/@comment-26242189-20170811212334

AViciousRainbow wrote:

Something that I feel would help out the story is if you made parallels to the creature and the child. Maybe, the child is actually a strange creature itself. At the end, you could mention that it grabs the MC with tentacles (or some sort of weird appendage) as a way to make that distinction. It would be a role reversal; an unknown creature stalks its prey which it thinks is a human, only to find out that it is a creature itself that was hunting it. The last sentence is what I was trying to imply, that the child is pretending to be the prey in order to lure the monster into its habitat and kill it.

I implemented the clues you advised, so is there anything else specifically that needs adjusting?