Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27859657-20161211233350/@comment-25975226-20161213001925

The 'is' isn't actually a problem, it's just not a very well put together sentence. You could try something like "Like in the Old West, shooting with guns and howling with zest." You don't have to use that exactly but you see how it kind of makes more sense? There's nothing wrong with your version it's just a bit clunky.

I would go with all of Derpy's suggestions provided above. Watch the rhythm in some places (I'm terrible at poetry so I understand how hard that can be). It's not altogether too creepy, but if you follow his suggestions it definitely meets the quality standards for the wiki so you should have no problems uploading it.