Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30271126-20171024172508/@comment-32764586-20171024183654

I'm obliged to review.

There are no grammar/Spelling mistakes. However, there isn't a very strong plot with this. The idea is good, but it needs more of a story and evidence towards this claim you make. All in all I would sit down and think about different ways to execute this idea. Spend hours, even days on it. Great writing comes with time and effort.