Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35501632-20180505213611/@comment-36126133-20180709043132

Missing initial capitals on Sentences. Also, you're using several different verb tenses all at the same time. Especially, you're jumping from past to past perfect to present and back again. A grammar check would catch some of this, but you'll also have to review and make manual corrections.

Your best bet for learning grammar and proper verb use would be an English composition class. If you're still in school, ask your instructors for help. If you're out of school, an "English 1A" or "English 101" class at a community college would help. Good luck.