Talk:Sakatosh

Sir,  you need to do the following things in order to be taken seriously on this site:

1. USE INDENTS. For christ's sake, it is not that hard. Nobody likes reading a single page-long paragraph.

2. USE CORRECT GRAMMAR. "laide" is not how you spell "laid". A few MINOR mistakes is OK, but THAT many, and THAT obvious? C'mon. I don't need to be a grammar nazi to be annoyed at those mistakes.

3. AND THEN A SKELETON POPPED OUT!!1! Stop using cliques. Just don't do it. "First everything was ok, then some scary stuff happened, then A SKELETON POPPED OUT! Sound familiar? It shouldn't. Please fix. For the love of God, Satan, and Jeff the Killer, PLEASE FIX.

4. USE A GENEROUS HELPING OF SCARY SAUCE. Don't know what scary sauce is? Read "Misery" by Stephen King or watch the original "Evil Dead." Just for good measure, here's an example:

"The two men walked through a scary part of woods. They turned around when they heard a branch break. Then they saw the monster, freaked out, then was killed in a gory way. The End." Not much fun, is it?

Here's the classic creepypasta way:

"The two men cautiously crept through the dewy foliage, not uttering a whisper. They knew what was out there, what could be prowling behind the nearby trees. The near-silence built in intensity until the tension was so thick they could have cut it with a knife. Their nerves raw and on edge, their eyes darted around, constantly searching for signs of the creature they were after, and knowing that, at any instance, the hunter could become the hunted. Nobody would hear them scream..."

Now, which one ended up being scarier?

Exactly.

Now please delete this eyesore before a mod sees it and realizes it is a crappypasta (yes that is a legit subgenre of creepypasta) and deletes it for you, then go and improve your writing skills using the tips I gave you. Then come back and try again.

For now, I give you this 1 out of 5. Cherish it and hold it dear to your heart, so you can learn your lesson and never disgrace creepypasta literature with this crap again.