Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29036869-20191025032332/@comment-44610077-20191225202929

As I used to be an avid Wii player, the part at the ending where he wondered if there was a microphone made me laugh. There should be parts in it that make the story seem more realistic, for example, after Eteled speaks, it takes a while for him to respond, causing the narrator to realize slowly what’s going on.