Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31424920-20180912211450/@comment-35711173-20180913224040

Starlessandbibleblack,

You know the ending. You know why we should stay hooked. So far, we don't.

For a creepypasta, 3,300 words is on the large size. By the time this first installment was over, we should have had a real reason to want to go through the second one. Do you understand the hook at the end of the first part of a two part TV show to make you tune in tomorrow? I saw no hook.