Talk:Frankenstein/@comment-24060553-20131122234005

Frankenstein is not orginal, he was never pose to be scary; thinnk outside the box other wise its really taste less and saying THE END; its not strong wording; its insulting just to say THE END, you should be telling the reader, maybe theres more, who knows. that is a less controlling the reader. You aren't grabbing the reader. You made this boring on a short chain that chain telling the reader more than he or she needs to; though, I have to say you tried and this wasn't Metal Gear Death bad, you weren't that creative with it but some odd things in your writting which isn't bad but its just not good enough. Put more effort into it please, a short read is scary to but if you want to make a long one make it jumping at the reader doesn't wanna stop reading and then you can make the scares just stupid as you want.