Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44482918-20200206023924/@comment-36627132-20200206030658

Since the other Burno stories have been deleted, there is really nothing that can be done with this one unless you incorporate them into the story somehow (as well as an ending). Otherwise all we have is a fragment of a story.

The spelling could use some sprucing up. Remember to put spaces after periods, and speaking of periods, this story could use some punctuations in it. Names ("timmy" and "tommy" for example) should always be capitalized, while the word "minutes" shouldn't be. And although not a rule, I suggest spelling out numbers to give your story a more professional look.

As for the story itself, there is very little here. Like I said, since the other parts are missing and this story isn't enough to be a stand-alone.