Talk:Jeff the Killer 2015/@comment-27694695-20160128220106

(Sorry for any grammar or spelling issues after all only 16) Great story 8/10. I find that there is one problem though, which you are free to disagree or agree to. I don't feel that Jeff broke. We can all agree that before the incident with Randy that Jeff was not a troubled youth; he never got into fights, as Jeff said, they were easy to get along with, as depicted by how Jeff first reacts to Randy and his gang or even how they befriended the movie owner, leaving us to think that emotionally, mentally, physically, or a combination of these things he broke. We can all agree that we've all broke to a certain extent, whether this be yelling at someone, getting into a fight, or even, as depicted in the story, murdered someone. We also know that there is always a motive, in this case getting back at his parents, and future down the road, Randy. But that doesn't explain why he would then be depicted killing other people besides maybe a short few in the town. That is the problem I have with this story. What's the motivation for killing others in stories later on? To the writer: Great story and I really have no say in how good your work is because I know I couldn't have done better. And I enjoyed the story. Hope to see future stories written by you!