Talk:The Figure in the Tree/@comment-24077689-20140506185642

Love the build-up, I love the story. It's clever.

The beats, especially in the beginning are a bit strange, it interrupts the flow of the poem largely because I'm unsure of how to read it. It feels a bit more like a sing-song than a poem. But again, I very much like the progression, I like the build up. I think adding a semi-colon, or maybe a dash in there somewhere would help the reader discern where to pause a little easier.