Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20170409203227/@comment-28428152-20170417124635

I see your point about each of these things, and reading back through it I also noticed that some of my phrasing is a little repetitive. As a reader, what kinds of things would you like to see that reveal more anout the characters? Dialogue? A bit more in between their arrival and Paul's disappearance? And I also realized that shredding a car probably wouldn't be bery quiet, so I'll have to work the ungodly noise that would make into it. Thanks for the feedback, it's much appreciated.