Talk:Exhausted/@comment-Jay ten-20160814130755

Just wanted to drop a note and let you know that this had significant improvements in the areas that I had problems with in your last story. Proper pacing, much more naturally written, and a good level of ambiguity. I feel like the ending could use some work. It simply felt too sudden and lacked the impact that I was hoping for. I'm probably the sickest I've been in over a decade, so apologies for the weak feedback. This was much better, in my humble opinion.