Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5614678-20170207141019/@comment-28060931-20170207142843

I loved the story, kinda seemed like something from a Twilight Zone episode. It's a chilling concept. I would suggest coming up with a better name than "The Loving God", it seems uninspired and boring. Unless you wanted to portray how lazy humans are that they do need a god like this. Also, if the God is so smart and so well-meaning I'd say that he would come up with a way to counteract the fatness.

Also, how the fuck is this guy writing? He's trapped in a fucking pod, unable to open his eyes? I'm just nitpicking all these details because I can't actually find actual errors her. But I loved the story, it seemed like something Ray Bradbury would write; our ultimate technological advancements just make humanity lazy fucks who are too bothered to wipe their own ass.