Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34025893-20180315053353/@comment-28428152-20180317012725

This reads like a slightly elaborated outline for a story. Also, you misspelled Oregon in the title. I would suggest going back and really fleshing it out. This story is probably about a third of the length it needs to be. Add dialogue, build scenes, flesh out the characters. Make it feel real. It's also rife with typos.