Talk:My Final Thoughts/@comment-11791428-20140511234054

well seeing as how you asked, I did take a look at this one. I like it, it is very engaging, and I like how it is presented. It definately seems like an accurate expression of what those who end up being pushed to the edge are like. Although one thing I found weird was how it you were referring to people in general throughout the whole thing only to change to your own perspective in that last sentence which seems a bit off putting. I personally would think it would flow more if it was changed to something like " But others fear life because they know exactly what to expect, and would rather die today, than live through the torment of tomorrow." That is unless this was meant to express your actual state of mind. Either way, I would say you did a pretty good job if the only thing I needed to complain about was the perspective of the last sentence.