Talk:The Face of Fear/@comment-25052433-20140805211202

If I had to describe this story, I would use the word potential. While I am not a firm believer that everything must go through the Writer's Workshop, I would have suggested letting this one have a go.

I fixed a lot of grammatical errors for you, however, I am not sure the plot is going to keep you afloat.

What you did well here:

The old man character was creepy, and the idea of a picture waving could send a chill if read in the right mood.

What needs improvement:

Very little character development on either of the protagonists.

Nothing is explained or resolved. Who was the old man? What was his connection to either of the characters that he was stalking?

Grammar errors were everywhere.

-Advice does not have a plural. You can give a piece of advice, or you can give lots of advice. That word is always presented in the singular.

-Don't use quotations for emphasis. Italics is the way to emphasize a word. Quotation marks are for, well, quotations.

I give this one, as it stands right now, a 4.5/10. I would like to see you refine it because I do believe with a richer plot and better character development, this could be a good pasta.