Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5614678-20190722213537/@comment-9041013-20190723115033

I don't see much in this other than a bootleg Superman-Captain America gone slightly wrong. It's not exactly original with the titles and ideas, in a bad way. Not in a way of "oh you're doing some common", you go full blown Superman in that introduction. If you want darker Superhero themed works to look at I suggest reading Watchmen or Death of the Family, and pretty much anything where Red Hood is the main character.

As for the whole plot with the nazis, Dr Bob already covered all of that. So I'll just second what he said. It seems a little lackluster and unorganic.

Not to mention that this story isn't exactly horror, it's more of a dark fantasy thing. I mean, the descriptions are there but it kind of feels lacking in something. Like that "it's unpleasant to read" touch, I didn't see it there.