Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36815674-20180919161410/@comment-36393004-20180919165903

Not a bad story idea and with some touching up and a little additions it could be a good creepypasta. Below I have an example of things you might consider.

Example Re-Write: I worked in a restaurant and normally did not get off until rather late. Wednesdday night the house was packed and by the time my shift ended I was exhausted. I had never wanted to be in my bed more than that moment.

As I made my way to my car, I noticed a vehicle on the side of the road with the high beams on. The lights seemed to be aimed directly at my car. I had always been one to be aware of my surroundings at all times, but this even had me feeling a bit paranoid.

As I passed by the car, I could tell someone was sitting in the driver's seat. I could not make out any features, simply the silhuoette of a their body. I tried to shake off the nervous feeling it gave me. I was just ready to get home after such a long and tiring day.

The path home was long and winding private roads that could be dangerous if you were not careful. I watched as the car from work followed me through each bend, about a mile and a half behind. As I neared my driveway, I looked up to notice that I could no longer see the headlights of the car.

I instantly became worried that they had lost control on one of the curves. They were hard enough to traverse during the day but a real hazard this late at night. I felt as though I should at least go back and check on the driver, so I headed back down the road.

I noticed a mangled vehicle in the distance and I immediately could tell someone would have been hurt. My heart raced as I ran toward the vehicle, unsure of what I would find. When I found the man lying face down on the pavement I slowly rolled him over onto his back while checking for a pulse. I suddenly realized just how much he resembled me and the fact he was driving the same kind of car as mine.

I left behind a wife and two kids that night. I should have never driven while so tired. I hope I will see them on the other side.