Talk:Pandora's Box: Sine/@comment-25052433-20150720002644

Okay folks, let's crack open Pandora's Box and take a look at Sine!

I sort of have to judge this one differently than the rest. Mainly because, while this does have the right elements to qualify for the contest, it is really more of a ritual pasta than a demon/devil pasta. Now, that is not to say that it isn't a great pasta, because believe me, this was one of the best ritual pastas that I have read on here in quite some time. It was actually pretty damned scary, and certainly rates as well as Hide and Seek By Yourself, or any of the other really popular ritual pastas. But, enough about that, let's review it.

Creativity: As I mentioned above, you took the basic components of a ritual pasta and really stepped it up. Honestly, I find most ritual stories to be interesting but not really scary, as they read more like textbooks than an actual story. And while the idea is not the most creative, as it follows the normal ritual recipe, you did a great job tweaking it your own way.

Quality of Plot: One of the problems with ritual stories is that they fall on the ritual itself to sort of serve as both plot and concept. In this case, you did a bit more by going into the hiding and waiting aspect. Still though, it was not rich in plot as a more traditional story would have been.

Quality of Character: Once again, the issues of the ritual pasta haunts this one. While the idea of Sine, as an entity, raised this one above the normal for ritual pastas, the story did more in describing Sine and her nature/summoning, than it did actually developing her as a character.

Creepiness: You certainly succeeded here. This is one of the creepiest ritual pastas I have ever read. You hit certain points in here that really made it pop out, like how Sine appears in another room of your home, or how, if you fail to photograph her, you have to continue to play. Both of those elements really brought this story home and made it a true standout.

I would love to score this one higher, and trust me, if this had been a contest strictly for ritual pastas, this would have been a front runner. However, you did lose a lot of points in areas such as plot and characters.

I'll give this one 40 points, and with Grim's score of 75, that brings you to a total of 115 poinst.

Final Score 115 points.