Talk:The Girl and the Deceitful One/@comment-24040907-20140928074109

What a lovely twist. The story was light and free flowing, blending and weaving like atomic particles at CERN. It was set in the style of classic Fantasy, whilst remaining easy for an uninitiated reader to pick up and understand. I was pleased with this, as I do not always favor Fantasy, but I liked this tale quite well.

I wish the story could be expanded a bit more. I wish to hear descriptions of the customs, culture, and environment that our characters occupy. Without these descriptions, I was forced to conjure my own mental image of the setting/characters. In the end I imagined the place looking like the Void town from Dishonored. I also pictured Arishana looking a bit like Alma Wade.

Note that this is not always unfavorable. C.S. Lewis wrote Chronicles of Narnia devoid of any serious description because he intended for the reader to create their own descriptions in their imagination.

Furthermore, I'd like to see a sequel to this story, as I have many unanswered questions. What exactly is Orien? A demon? A Werewolf? Does Merilda ever escape? I feel as though the ending was rushed, but the story has only just begun.

Rating 6.25/10