Talk:Something Awful/@comment-5101683-20170210063805

At first, I wasn't sure how good this would be. The strange way it was written made me dislike the story initially, but I guess that was more of a shock thing. Once I actually got into the story, it seemed good. It doesn't explain things, but I guess explanation isn't really necessary with this setup. I can't find anything wrong with the story, except for some mistakes with sentence fragments. Everything appears to be in order.