Talk:Reprise/@comment-31115489-20170603163743

this pasta was okay. the biginning was fantastic, i dont think you could have done the first part better. the real problem was the end. it seemed like you were struggling to find a way to end your "story." the part where you describe yourself writing the story really took away from the pasta, you mentioned other creepypasta characters such as jeff, but i think that also took away from the story. you should have kept it more vauge, kept it in its own world. maybe find some different examples of literature, you mention the same 3 stories at the end as you did in the beginning, and rather than making it feel like like you wrapped up your story, it kind of just feels forced. i would suggest putting more time into the ending of a story, as it is the part that will be most fresh in the readers mind when they finish it, and thus, is one of the most inportant parts.