Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33698957-20190119144005/@comment-36815674-20190119200417

The title is fine, looks like a Admin fixed the bold sentences for you.

As I stated on the last post your story is good just needs a little work. First paragraph is the most important.

👇 Add to it to make the reader want to stay.

Do you ever get a song stuck in your head? Most people find it annoying - a minor inconvenience, but I dread the day a fresh set of lyrics start looping around in my head.

Add little more detail to the story to give it that creepy feeling.

As one of the narrators for the site I can see my self making a video of your story if you give it more of a eerie, scary, horror Etc feeling.

Keep up the good work.