Talk:The Painting/@comment-25955152-20151211050042

So this was a good story, I love the concept but it really needs more details. It was very choppy almost as though you just took the idea and threw something together. Like how it goes from him on the internet and studying the painting to him enacting his friends to the cops. There should be more detail like "the painting started to become an obsession as the days passed he started to neglect his friends, his work and every day living. He was consumed with the painting"  something like that to add more to the story and make it less choppy. But I absolutely love the concept. Definitely keep up the good work!!! 5/10