Talk:Man in the Image/@comment-10435568-20140209100143

This had an okay beginning, but just got lazy. You can't just tell us, "He got closer every day, I did the same thing, blah, blah, blah." That's lazy writing and sure as hell isn't going to scare anyone.

There's a legend in the horror universe, of a mysterious tool, used only by the elite authors of horror... It's called build up. Use. It.

There another, euqally mysterious tool in the horror universe: all caps. All caps does not substitute for emphasis or shock value. It's not even surprising, it just ruins whatever atmosphere you set up. Unless a character is yelling, all caps aren't necessary. For example:

"Hey, Jim, how was school today? Did you have fun?"

"HEY, JIM, HOW WAS SCHOOL TODAY? DID YOU HAVE FUN?"

The only time when all caps is used is in comics, because it's easier to read. Otherwise, it's actually harder to read.


 * Okay, cool it, PTBC, don't lose your mind again. Everyone deserves a chance.*

The ending is predictable and cliche; a tad unavoidable with a story like this, but if the ending and build up are properly written, I'd give this a thumbs up.

5/10