Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34853659-20180928200847/@comment-9041013-20180928225319

Okay, so before you take Bob's comment a little too seriously, what he should be saying is that your story is full of bad cliches. It's not a troll pasta, nor it looks like one. You are simply relyiong on the worst themes possible. Haunted Internet content is over used and unscary. Mentioning a bunch of Creepypasta related stuff is kind of a killer blow, or a suicidal blow, because they are usually followed up by what you did here - a scheme of bad ideas.

Time stamps are irrelevant

Super disenticised to horror person who suddenly feels bad about horror content, unbelievably unrelatable.

Why on earth is the narrator dead? It's silly.

Here's what you can do, a cop invistigates the end result of your story, and comes across all these weird internet stuff seemingly out of the blue. Slowly from there other supernatural things happen to him until something which is more than Zalgo appears before him and kills him in a very creative way.

That way you get to do all the internet stuff, even mention CPs and still not coming out with a story the level of "Jeck is Back"

This needs woooooork, and patience... you can't just shoot out a story into the site, you need to work your ass off, for the most part.