Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180905233106/@comment-9041013-20180906141808


 * Honestly, I don't see this as a good notion, it's misleading as hell. The idea that wars are to blame for whatever harm they bring is true. Wars are the reason there are the harms that they bring upon humanity. You can't blame wars for climate change or the existance of disease for example, but wars are front and center the reason for mass deaths on a multinational scale. Wars are the reason certain peoples (nations, ethnic groups, that kind of jazz) are stuck in poverty and dispair. There's nothing you can do about that notion.

Here's another rather unpleasant fact, we, humans, did not invent actual wars, our pre hominid ancestors probably did. Baboons are known to engage in miniscule "military" raids for various physical gains.

All in all, I like the poem literally, some issues with it that were not address would be,

"It is not my fault, your world of smog Your lungs it fills, your oceans clogs And eats away like rabid dogs But the blame lies not with me"

This whole stanza makes not too much sense, I doubt anyone blames wars on the industrial damage we produce.

You could instead present a "pro war" stance, one that talks about the good that war had brought over the years; technological advancements, the discovery of Penicillin, national unity, baby booming etc etc etc. I am of course not supporting wars, being on both civilian and military sides of an ongoing conflict. It's a terrible thing to have a war around you.

Other than that I guess it's pretty good