Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39532078-20190529130025/@comment-9041013-20190529162343

Ugh, when AIs get confused with your English, there is a serious problem. I had to break down and reassemble some sentences so they would make sense. You have to work on your English here pretty extensively.

Also, a bit of insight for your plot, instead of going for "Mah haunted game trying to murder me" remember we have VR games now. My bet is that horror survival VR will always sell well as it goes big. So just come up with a very effective VR horror survival game as a plot. Nothing supernatural, nothing weird, just very convincing horror work.