Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10319977-20151014231140/@comment-2240864-20151014231948

I've found the weakest part to your stories are the fact that they seem to want to end before they begin. Don't forget that writing is about showing, not telling. If it's not his brother, what is it? That story was not really set up in a way that justified the payoff. It seemed like the beginning, not the end. Setup to payoff.