Talk:Abandoned Servers/@comment-24618087-20140408170850

Along with what others have said, I also noticed some flaws.

Near the beginning, you stated that going on empty servers was a hobby just to look at things left behind, but then immediately after you said you were payed by a friend for logging them in. This would make it a job.

Also, near the end, you said that you had screamed after the goppleganger had replicated your actions, but the way you wrote it made it seem like you were violently laughing like a maniac.

Other than that, there are also grammar issues, and I'd give this a 6/10.