Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33979162-20190519031547/@comment-39520125-20190519162456

The writing is segmented into these big, chunky walls of text that look bad. I would suggest breaking them down into smaller paragraphs to make the story flow better. Secondly, a lot of the grammar is wonky. I won't go over everything that's wrong, but here are some tips that you may find valuable.

1) Always put a space after a comma.

2) Use punctuation to stop your sentences from leading into one another.

3) Make sure your wording is as concise as possible.

Using a grammar-checking site like Grammarly might help you with these tips.