Talk:Eidolon/@comment-25941663-20170602133254

A creepy little tale. It flowed nicely, and I particularly liked the imagery.

The story does, though, suffer a bit from purple prose. At points the fancy wording and phrasing distracted me from the plot. A couple of examples:

"yet he pressed on in silence and isolation in this circular field confined by the entrapping pines of Cook forest."

"The revolver’s powerful roar erupted throughout the woods, sending black birds hidden within the trees to vanish in the shadows of the night"

While these on their own are fantastic, when the prose is full of them it becomes distracting. In my opinion, such wording should be used sparingly to increase the effect.

Overall though, a nice read.