Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20150126141341/@comment-24381191-20150126182118

ScrewYouDinkleberg wrote: Hmph, this sounds like the recent story I published. I smell coincidence.

Anyway, this sounds good for me, but it sounded quite confusing to understand when I read for the first time. One thing I'd say, though, is to separate the last phrase from the last paragraph, to make the ending sound more effective. Thanks, also, was the story you were talking about "They Don't Know?" The basic idea for this did come from the first line, to be honest. XD.