Talk:Holder of the Present

Dooming :)
I love the menecing scenery in your writing.

However, I'm not so sure about the ways the person the narrator narrorates can die in such a broad manner, such as the demons killing me, or simply what the girl says and reacting to the girl's comment. I'd want more specific ways that "I" would die to make me cringe, or horrify me. It is finished, but I think it has potential to be more :)

8.5/10 Dream Hacked 04:32, April 17, 2012 (UTC)