Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-39233456-20190423233348/@comment-35911608-20190424015213

From a story perspective, I feel things go a little too quickly, and it could be elongated to add more dread to Rydell’s situation, which would pay off more in his demise.

However, as you yourself have stated in the comments on its original posting, this is the plot line to Nacht der Untoten, a Call of Duty: Zombies map. I’m not sure whether this falls spinoff, fan fiction, or plagiarism, but I don’t think it’s allowed here overall. Those just are the rules, I don’t make em. Sorry.