Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-6822927-20190406132621/@comment-6822927-20190409211136

BloodySpghetti wrote: KingSparta300 wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: I think this whole thing could've been avoided if he just chose to write the story based on his own experiences with the idea eater. It's that simple, you have no ideas, but something's crazy going on... use that. Bang story ends. The moment your biggest conflict ends before you expand on it, it's a bad conflict.

You just needlessly went into describe this whole thing because of a writer's block induced by "something oh so very horrible awfully bad"

Could've just written this as his story with an ending where he admits that this has actually happened to it, first hand or second hand, where the narrator reads this and discovers in the end that all he had read is true and that his friend commited suicide.

This whole thing is somewhat overly dramatized with awkward registers all over, ever read a Stephen King novel? he uses curse words, same goes for Neil Gaiman... and these are just examples everyone should be familiar with... Writers don't tend to go in on a fancy register in this day and age.

the descriptions come off as funny at points, "I've never seen such pure madness before" from a grinning person... because... that's somehow so insanely insane.

This needs work. This story is overdramatic, yes, but it's also meant as a tribute to Lovecraft's work and he could be really overdramatic at times. Indeed, the part where the Eater of Ideas has the faces of its victims all over its shell is inspired by part of the Dunwich Horror. That being said, some parts do come across as a bit too awkward for my liking.

Also, Richard Pickett is supposed to be going crazy, so he's not exactly thinking right. The whole idea eating thing also prevents him from really thinking of the whole write this down and then kill himself idea you came up with. Have you actually read Lovecraft, he had bonkers ideas... this... this was light compared to him.

Also, he wrote it down, or told it to someone... so he could write it down, or pass it on... so... I've read a lot of Lovecraft, though this story takes more inspiration from the Hounds of Tindalos, unconsciously so, really. I just started writing it all down with no plan or fixed vision, letting the story tell itself.

I know how Peter Upton writing this all down looks. I've been trying to come up with a solution to this, and the best I have is that Peter is also starting to go mad and can't help himself writing it all down.