Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20180901022714/@comment-10502460-20180904003539

BloodySpghetti wrote: So the story is fine, even though I think a giant spider isn't a great idea to symbolize evil incarnate, but oh well.

You should do a spell check because at some point you've made some silly mistakes, like a double "it" in the beginning along with confusing its and it's somewhere there. Also, personnel is a singular noun.

Just run a mechanical re-check of the story and you should be fine.

The idea is more "evil manifested" than "evil incarnate." I agree there are more visceral images I could have chosen, but for this story I purposefully made it understated and relatively mundane.