Talk:Os Immortale/@comment-35359331-20181026133151

"And let there be light. That was God. I was quoting God." -Wheatley (Portal 2)

I just re-read the entire series while listening to the soundtrack of The World Ends With You. So, like a bolt from the blue, it's time for the Reaper Review!

I'm not going to hide it, I've enjoyed the Lenoresfield series since the beginning, and unlike the Hunger Games trilogy, it keeps getting better with each addition. I noticed a few times where you should've used "its" instead of "it's" (and vice-versa), but there weren't any errors that interrupted my enjoyment of the story as a whole.

Just to be sure I didn't miss anything important, I spent about three minutes re-reading this same story, and I guess you could say I spent Three Minutes Clapping. The one critique I have is that you haven't tied everything together except through the mentions of Aezir here and there; although it isn't immersion-breaking, it is a little odd, to say the least.

Overall, great story, but I'd say that you need to start tying the events together somehow. Answering the question "How'd the people learn of Aezir?" would be a great way to accomplish this.