Talk:The White Men Came/@comment-7673575-20180226190514

Oh Lords, this entry was so British, I had to re-read it in Cockney all over again. No regrets.

Review time.

GENERAL QUALITY: The language and the grammar were absolutely fucking flawless. The extremely colourful vocabulary compensated for sparse and scattered typos. Score: 25/25

HORROR FACTOR: It shows up late, and even then, it's more of a compressing uneasiness than a real, legit horror. The only thing that this story truly lacks. Score: 13/25

LYRICAL INTERPRETATION: When I read that last line of text, all I could do is say "Flawless Victory" in my best MK Narrator voice. And I was mostly right. The story seems to focus more on the origins of persecution than the actual persecution like the sond does, so that is a little limp, but it's overall very well interpreted and implemented. Score: 22/25

ENTERTAINMENT VALUE: I have to say, I was through and through entertained by the flow of the story. So subtle and docile, yet the diversity of vocabulary was almost too frivolous. I found myself deeply immersed in the story, and couldn't let go until I read that one final line. Outstanding job, even if I say so myself. Score: 25/25

FINAL SCORE: 85/100