Creepypasta Wiki:Deletion Appeal

The Truth
This is one of my first stories, which while does not necessarily give me a free pass, it leads me to question if that is the sole reason for deletion. I do not see how this story goes against any of the guidelines. I have read the quality standards over and over again, and I have read the story over and over again. While it is inspired by other stories such as funnymouth, it is not a ripoff in any way. It uses only one minor aspect from funnymouth, which is the happy reoccurring dream turning sour, but that's not the meat of the story. I am not angry in any way (sorry if I come across that way), but I am just... confused. I also counted the number of cliches. One. Only one. If there is not a large number of cliches, no elements of critical importance stolen, and it is not against the quality standards, can you please un-delete it? Cheers,

GREATEST1Official (talk) 14:56, October 4, 2016 (UTC)

Story here: http://pastebin.com/s2z63KcX


 * I'm sorry, but the writing is just off. It's dry/robotic and awkward, and the story is underdeveloped. There are also little issues here and there with tense and punctuation, but nothing major. Please read over our How to Write Creepypasta page, writing advice pages, style guide, and consider using our writer's workshop for feedback.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 01:32, October 5, 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the advice!
 * GREATEST1Official (talk) 14:56, October 4, 2016 (UTC)
 * GREATEST1Official (talk) 14:56, October 4, 2016 (UTC)

The Evacuation
After having my pasta deleted, I reposted it in the Writer's Workshop where I learned what were the problems with my story. I think I raised it to the quality standards. Here's the last revision of my story: http://pastebin.com/Pu3QFr8t Graiovski Tek (talk) 09:23, August 6, 2016 (UTC)


 * Unfortunately I think you're rushing this a bit as you're still overlooking a lot of issues. A lot of the issues I mentioned are still present in the story. What I pointed out was not a comprehensive list of everything that was incorrect and this revision still has a lot of issues. I'm going to have to turn this appeal down due to the number of spelling, capitalization, wording, punctuation, and story issues still present.


 * Spelling: "I can't belive (believe) what's happening in this block!", "His name is Bruce and he tries to make live (life) horrible for everyone", "Then he opens the door to the entrance and I hear a deafening shreak (shriek)", etc. There are more instances of this throughout the story.


 * Punctuation: "I'll wait before the cops come here and find you pointing a gun at me(period missing)", ""Do you think I'm gonna show you my back while you have a gun pointed at me.(should be a question mark)", "I told you to leave when your parents died. Why didn't you listen? My patience reaches an end - always.".(extra period not needed)", etc.


 * Wording: "I don't suffer from double personality or anything." do you mean multiple personality or dissociative personality disorder? Double negatives. "His eyes were full of fear, but that didn't make me think he didn't do it." Avoid using two negatives (not, no, never, etc.) in a sentence as it isn't correct. :Capitalization: "Give (Give) me to the cops?""


 * The awkward wording is back in full: "Fastly (quickly is a word, but fastly isn't.), I raise the bat and lower (awkward wording) over his body and hit him in his head and then on his right hand and then I grab his pistol.", "Does he... think I am the killer? How dares he?", "Then I fastly hide under my bed and try to not make a sound."


 * Story issues: You change tenses a lot throughout the story from past tense ("He turned to leave, but I felt the need to do something, so I grabbed his shoulder and he pointed the pistol at me with trembling hands.") to present tense ("Joseph smiles and fills me with fear. He turns again, but I just can't let him kill anymore.") and back. You need to be uniform when telling a story as there are no shifts in time. Also since you're shifting tenses, it feels odd that at times you write the story as if it's happening in real-time like this: "I don't have a gun. What the... I must get one as fast as I can. I must move out of the block and get my gun." Additionally the first sentence implies he doesn't have a gun, then the third sentence contradicts this by saying he does.


 * Story issues cont.: The lack of description is still present in the story. Events like this feel boring without much emotion or description added to the scenario. "Suddenly, he pulls the trigger and the bullet flies through her neck. Gina doesn't shoot as she falls on the floor, dead. Clara, in the doorway, almost starts crying". Lines like: "Joseph feels an anger he cannot comprehend." also weaken the story as the protagonist doesn't know what Joseph is feeling as he is writing this from his perspective.


 * Story issues end: The appearance of the old man at the end really feels added in to the story. "He crawls near me with his mouth agape and looks me in the eyes. I hear a voice in my head, one that I remember, grumbling in a wicked way: "I told you to leave when your parents died. Why didn't you listen? My patience reaches an end - always."." There really isn't anything to connect him to the other people losing their minds and killing each other so it comes off as unnecessary. Additionally, when in the story did this encounter with the man happen when his parents died? It comes out of no where and feels tacked on. I'm sorry, but there are a lot of issues here and a majority of them are with the story itself. Just correcting the mechanical issues isn't a viable way to get your story approved. You need to actually re-write and revise your story, get feedback and repeat the process. I', turning down the appeal based off of the issues above. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:06, August 6, 2016 (UTC)

His Insanity
I've worked with EmpyrealInvective to address his issues with the story, and I feel it's up to quality standards. Here's the link. CappkaTalk 12:19, July 16, 2016 (UTC)


 * See your talk page.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 13:53, July 16, 2016 (UTC)

Demonic Whispers
I posted a story earlier just moments ago called Demonic whispers, which was deleted moments later after posting. I believe it does live up to the standards as not did I go over it 3 times, 1 once on open office, 2 on deviantart, and a third time before posting here for any grammar errors. Here's the link to the posted artical and deviantart -> link

The other 2 parts to the story can be read there as well.

Shikiira (talk) 18:12, July 24, 2016 (UTC)


 * I'm not the one that deleted your story, but after reading only about a fourth of it I encountered several issues with tense/grammar/punctuation/format/etc. Please read over our How to Write Creepypasta page, writing advice pages, style guide, and consider using our writer's workshop for feedback.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 22:58, July 24, 2016 (UTC)

Generalized Anxiety Disorder
I worked very hard on this. I think it's good. Why was it deleted?


 * I'm sure you did, and I'm sure you do. The problem is there were multiple mistakes in the first few sentences. It was deleted for not meeting the quality standards as the deletion message mentions. If you can't be bothered to read over those links or to read over the rules at the top of this page, why should I bother explaining anything? This is at the top of this page:


 * "Please note that this is not a place to ask why your story was deleted; it's for contesting deletions. If you'd like feedback on your story and/or specific reasons as to why it was deleted, you can try posting it on the writing help forum. Admins are not obligated to give a reason for overturning an appeal."


 * You have capitalization and grammar issues that are explained on the style guide page, which is linked in the deletion message.
 * I know it had some quality issues, I just want to know hat I did wrong specifically.
 * I know it had some quality issues, I just want to know hat I did wrong specifically.
 * I know it had some quality issues, I just want to know hat I did wrong specifically.


 * Please read over our How to Write Creepypasta page, writing advice pages, style guide, and consider using our writer's workshop for feedback.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 13:39, August 9, 2016 (UTC)

My case for my story "Mental Illness Isn't a Good Basis for a Horror Story"
I see my story about an obsessive stalker has been removed for reasons related to "quality standards." I assume this is because of my story's "wall of text" appearance.

Now, if you look at the actual story, you will see that it is divided into paragraphs. However, when I copied and pasted it from my word document, there was no space between the paragraphs, and I did not realize this. I can add that space in if my story is put back up.

Second, if the deletion was due to my "lack of a storyline," I would like to argue this. My story did have a plot, a beginning middle and end, an expisition, etc. To elaborate: - basic plot: BPD sufferer is driven by abuse and an obsessive nature to stalking their ex-boyfriend - exposition: narrator suffers from BPD and had an abusive ex - rising action: narrator has been obsessively thinking about the man who abused them - climax: narrator tells us that they are currently watching the ex-boyfriend through his window, revealing that they are stalking him - falling action: there is little of this, but that is common in many stories - resolution: author restates his love for the ex-boyfriend, and hints at the fact that he plans to do something to him (it is unclear)

I believe there is tension and good execution in this story, and it is well-written. I ask kindly that you put my story back up so I can fix the "wall of text" problem and keep my story for others to read and share.

Thank you.


 * It wasn't deleted for any reason other than being too underdeveloped for use of such a familiar concept - "climax: narrator tells us that they are currently watching the ex-boyfriend through his window, revealing that they are stalking him." It's not really your fault for not knowing how familiar this is, but that remains the reason. Your writing is fine, but the shorter a story is, the more original it has to be. Feel free to use our writer's workshop if you wanna get some feedback and work on further developing it.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 17:46, August 16, 2016 (UTC)

My appeal for Down In The Well part 1 of 2
Hello I've just been notified that my creepypasta had been deleted and I want to know why? I've just started using this page to post them so that might be one reason. The next one could be my spelling as I'm not very good at it. I do use a spell checker but sometimes they do get out. Also it might be that it wasn't finished as I was making a part 2.Or thta i had a massive block of text at one point.Another thing could of been the title with each word capitalized.The point is I really want my creepypasta back I spent 4 hours last night writing it. It really means a lot to me.


 * Like my number of messages on your talk page imply, your story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. As you've made no changes from the time of posting to this appeal, I'm denying your story on the grounds that it isn't up to quality standards. There are a lot of punctuation, wording, spelling, capitalization, and story issues here.


 * Punctuation issues: Commas missing where needed. "Welcome to Slough a town for everyone.", "we just had to deal with it pack", "Everything did look sad the houses white but slitghtly fading.", "The house did look ok and we thanked our new friend she also said her name was Anna.", etc. I suggest reading your story aloud to yourself to see where natural pauses come up and generally those areas require punctuation of some sort. Apostrophes missing from possessive words and contractions. "a present made by a vicar(')s money", "But thats (that's) just my opinion.", etc.


 * Awkward wording: "So like my whole family we just had to deal with it pack are (our) bags and go to this place.", "See just makes feel down doesn't it.(?)", " It wasn't much just a bed, A desk with a chair and a computer, a lamp and bedside table with some draws for clothes.", "It looked like it was frequently used as the rope was new and bucket was shiney with a wooden support and cobble finish which looked like (avoid reusing phrases as it comes off as redundant) it went quite far down", etc.


 * Capitalization: "We pulled up to our "new home" It (it) looked like the others white and faded", "a bit nicer. she (She) wore a dark blue dress and smart black shoes", "And before she left she asked if we where coming to church on sunday (Sunday)", "We had finished unboxing on saturday (Saturday) so my room was finished", " It wasn't much just a bed, A (a) desk with a chair and a computer,", etc.


 * Spelling: "Everything did look sad the houses white but slightly (slightly) fading.", "But not what I thought the sign ment. (meant)", "All the houses in the hamlet where (were) arranged in a circle", "The woman saw my intrest (interest) and explained", "And last of all was an attic which we where (were) told not to go up until we had settled in." etc. There really is no reason for there to be this many issues (there are at least ten other instances of misspellings here) as Word has a spell check.


 * Story issues: First things first, we don't accept unfinished stories. This wiki only accepts complete stories and yours really isn't standalone enough to be considered finished. In fact, there isn't enough to even qualify this as a creepy pasta. A majority of the story is centered around describing the town and its inhabitants. It basically is: 'protagonist moves to town, goes to church, meets Molly, and the story ends with a promise you'll finish it in a few days'. That really isn't enough to engage the reader and other than describing everything as gloomy, there really isn't a lot to convey that this is in fact a horror story. Due to the large number of mechanical issues and the fact that this story is unfinished, I'm turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:55, August 21, 2016 (UTC)

Afterlife
I'd like to make a Appeal for the story I had posted called Afterlife, it wasn't A long story simple and to the point, but after being on your site for over 3 minutes, one of the mods, deleted it, and I feel it was unjustified I'm trying to find out what is the deal it, wasn't badly written and its plot wasn't terrible. So i'd like it to be returned please.


 * I'm just going to copy/paste the message I left on your talk page as you seem uninterested in reading the messages and the headers to save myself time. Your story was deleted for not meeting quality standards and this appeal is being turned down for the same reason.


 * Capitalization: "most wonder how it, feels simply asking themselves; Does it hurt?.", "I was just Alone (alone) really the thought of no one to talk to or to listen to me in on itself was simply maddening.", " this long lonely path, When (when) I was young I never believed in a god", "or The (the) burning pit’s of fire and brimstone known as Hell", "motioning out swaying and moving back and forth no sound from it just turning and moving, In an unnatural way nothing should ever turn or move for us.", etc.


 * Punctuation issues: Random punctuation. "most wonder how it, feels simply asking themselves; Does it hurt?.", "Day’s (Days) turned into weeks", "or The burning pit’s of fire and brimstone known as Hell", etc. You also tend to forget to properly use commas. "I wasn't scared anything bothered me fully anymore just everything seemed so calm so relaxing.", "I had passed the living moving on moving through seeing them live their daily lives", "I was just Alone really the thought of no one to talk to or to listen to me in on (of) itself was simply maddening.", etc.


 * Spelling: "The segment of seeing the very life leave my body, in that small ally, (alley)", " I though it had been all just a bad dream", "When I saw him walking down the road he was in fear running screaming like a mad man looking around,(comma not needed) every corner like the devil himself walk (was) looking for him right then.", "“Run, run you full (fool) or it’ll get you!”" etc.


 * Awkward wording: "The segment of seeing the very life leave my body, in that small ally, with nothing more than just strange.", "I wasn't scared anything bothered me fully anymore just everything seemed so calm so relaxing.", "Walking out of the alley, then I looked up to see the sky, there had been nothing just the endless armament (armament means military weapons or an army formation, contextually this doesn't really make much sense as you don't elaborate on why the clouds are threatening.) clouds, flowing through the sky, no sun, no moon.", "Just those long down clouds, I paid no mind for them.", "He looked seeing me, surprised shocked", etc.


 * Run-on sentences: "Though my body remained the same never aging never changing just me continuing on this long lonely path, When I was young I never believed in a god, I felt that once you died there was nothing but now this was something I hadn’t thought of was this all that it was you walking down on earth no one seeing you and just taking your long turn away from the world this couldn’t be it.", "For I a now god fearing man turn and ran leaving behind this home and place begging and praying that that thing will never find me looking to the corner of my eyes, for whatever that thing is, knowing it will come for me and takes me to whatever god or devil know’s where, and I pray to any deity that it never will find me, I’d even sell my soul to the devil for protection.", etc.


 * Story issues: The story is extremely rushed and basically amounts to a man dying, seeing a Cthulhu knockoff, and running home. I actually finished reading your story and originally was going to delete it for being unfinished, but then I realized that that was the ending you were going for. There isn't a whole lot of story here and what you do have is awkwardly told. I'm sorry, but this needs a lot of work.


 * Story issues cont.: The ending is extremely anti-climactic and there's no sense of resolution. "For I a now god fearing man turn and ran leaving behind this home and place begging and praying that that thing will never find me looking to the corner of my eyes, for whatever that thing is, knowing it will come for me and takes me to whatever god or devil know’s where, and I pray to any deity that it never will find me, I’d even sell my soul to the devil for protection." The audience is left wondering what the point of the story was as there wasn't any real involving plot or strong conclusion. Are we (the audience) to assume that nothing happened after this point and there was no explanation for the creature's existence or the protagonist's final fate?


 * I'm sorry, but there are multiple other instances of awkward wording, spelling, punctuation, capitalization, run-on sentences, and story issues so I suggest proof-reading your stories as it'll likely save you the embarrassment of a pithy message only to realize that your story is far from perfect. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 15:34, August 21, 2016 (UTC)


 * I do want to appolgice I didn't see the first time you told me that ws a mistake on my end, and I am sorry and I can look over it, and also, wasn't planning for that to be a cthulhu knockoff, and technicly not being a smart ass but cthulhu is a water being if your refurering to a being more closer to the sky you'd want azthoth, also i respect your desision but i think you should look over the sight since recently i had saw, someone had actually posted the whole novel no changes word for word of frankenstine and other works of H.p.lovecraft that also breaks the sies rules.


 * I was talking about the physical description being a dead ringer for Cthulhu's common depiction in media, but kudos on trying to name-drop. As for those stories being on site, I suggest looking up public domain as there have been no wrong-doings there (in fact multiple sites have the complete works of Poe, Lovecraft, Shelley, etc.) as the stories have been properly cited and posted within the law. This discussion however has no place on a deletion appeal as your story has already been denied (per the header). EmpyrealInvective (talk) 15:53, August 21, 2016 (UTC)

Raindrop appeal
Hello I have just been notfied that my creepypasta has been delete. Can I be told why? The name of the creepypasta is Raindrop. It is was going to be my first creepypasta to be put on instagram as I have a horror account. If my story is to small I will make it longer. I have spelled checked it on freespellcheckers.com so that shouldn't have been a problem.Also there was a page before mine called Raindrop so maybe that was a reason why? So why was my pasta deleted?

Raven&#39;s Aren&#39;t Scary (talk) 14:29, September 1, 2016 (UTC)


 * As with your previous deletion (and denial), your story was removed for failing to meet quality standards. There are spelling ("The sound the tiny water bombs make as the (sic) crash onto the walls of your home."), fragmented sentences ("As more crash onto your walls." As implies a comparison is about to be made or a conjunctive sentence. As more rain crashes into the wall, what happens next?), awkward wording ("The little splashes it makes from your ceiling dropping into a small bucket to collect the liquid."), redundancy ("the sound the tiny water bombs make as the crash onto the walls of your home. As more crash onto your walls." you use crashing into your walls twice and the verb crash three times in a six sentence story.), and story issues. Here is a guide on flash fiction that I suggest you read as your story needed a lot more detail and focus to be effective. I'm sorry, but this story doesn't work very well with the numerous errors and the fact that this topic has been covered a number of times before. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 14:37, September 1, 2016 (UTC)

My first creepypasta story "Suicide Pact"
This was my first story I've ever made. I didn't see how it was rejected so fast without a reason. Although it was my first creepypasta, it was a bit cruel to delete it without a second notice. I've checked my spelling, made sure it was short, sweet, and bloody, etc. I hope you read this and reupload it. I want everyone to see it. Thanks. FYI, I can't get the story now because you guys deleted it. You guys find it because you're the ones who deleted it. I can't do anything about it.

Lugal El (talk) 05:14, September 7, 2016 (UTC)Lugal El


 * Entitled much? That concept is incredibly overused, and you did nothing to improve upon it. There are other issues like tense/grammar/etc. Also, please don't create categories. 4chan is not a category, and the blog post category is only for actual blogs, not stories written in blog format. Here is a copy of your story - http://pastebin.com/dc46bqp1


 * Jay Ten (talk) 13:00, September 7, 2016 (UTC)

The Evacuation - revision
Hello. I revised my pasta "The Evacuation" and decided to try to get it approved again. Here's the new version:http://pastebin.com/N59M4svY


 * I'm sorry, but I have to deny this appeal. You have made improvements to your story, but I honestly couldn't read past the first journal entry because the writing is simply too dry/robotic. There are also still a few technical issues here and there, but you have cleaned those up quite a bit. Keep reading and practicing; you will get better if you want to.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 13:25, September 7, 2016 (UTC)

Dollhouse
Hello. I'm new to Creepypasta Wiki, and I posted a new Creepypasta yesterday called Dollhouse. Before I posted it I made sure there wasn't a single story with the same name or plotline- I searched this Wiki for other stories. After going through many steps, and editing the story, I want to know if Dollhouse can be appealed. I have pasted a link to the editied version of Dollhouse below. The link connects to Quotev, to my account and my published stories. You don't need to sign up to see the story. On Quotev, I'm known as Kiddo Palpatine. Please consider the appeal for Dollhouse. Thank you.

https://www.quotev.com/story/8491856/Dollhouse


 * I'm sorry, but there are several major flaws with your story. I can also assure you that you didn't search the whole wiki, because that would mean you read over ten thousand stories. I have added your story to the writer's workshop and explained how to edit it. I'm sure you will receive some feedback soon. I will tell you right now that it needs a ton of work before making another appeal. Please read over our How to Write Creepypasta page, writing advice pages, and our style guide. Good luck.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 14:41, September 7, 2016 (UTC)

Please bring my "Unple" pasta back.
I wish to bring my CreepyPasta back called "Unple" which is about a character who is home alone and his game begins to glitch and things get a little odd and unpleasant, which is where the monster Unple, gets his name. Unple(asant). and I wish for my Pasta to be undeleted. I also wish to point out that this was my first Pasta and I wasn't happy that I sat for hours and made a creepy face all for it to be deleted. Here is a link to my Pasta so you may see what apparently was wrong with it. http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Unple   Pandabot2001 (talk) 10:12, September 17, 2016 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry, but your story suffers from a wide range of issues. Most of all, it is a haunted game. Those are blacklisted. Even if that wasn't the case, the story is filled with clichés, spelling mistakes, etc. It is a very long way from meeting our quality standards, and if it did you would need to make a spinoff appeal first. Please read over our How to Write Creepypasta page, writing advice pages, style guide, and consider using our writer's workshop for feedback.
 * Jay Ten (talk) 12:33, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Dream Relief
I would just like to appear the deletion of my story, simple as that. I double checked and proofread the whole thing and put it through spellcheck twice so here's the final product: http://pastebin.com/7ibk5nxr

Thank you, and please get back to me about this ASAP.

(The four tidles isn't working, even in source editor, so I'll just have to directly link URL's. Sorry) Profile:

☀http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User:DatWriterBoi Talk page: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_talk:DatWriterBoi

Thanks.


 * I'm afraid this does not meet our Quality Standards. While as an idea it has potential, the delivery is lacking. It's all too sudden with no build-up. The biggest issue with this is, though, the lack of atmosphere. The story feels dry, it doesn't feel like we're in a dream. Just text on a screen. There is no description of the environment or the characters and that makes it difficult for the reader to immerse themselves in the story.


 * Lastly, this has numerous grammar issues. Two such occasions are the following:


 * "You know are dreaming" - You missed the word 'you' between 'know' and 'are'.


 * "built here on it's own" - It is " its " instead of " it's ".


 * I'm sorry but I have to deny this. If you want to improve your writing, I suggest you take future stories to the Writer's Workshop and you read the Writing Advice Blogs. They help out a great deal. MrDupin (talk) 12:49, October 1, 2016 (UTC)

The Creature in the Woods
Honestly, I don't know what's wrong with this creepypasta. Good buildup, a climax that has you on the edge of your seat and an ending that keeps you intrigued even when the story is over. The worst thing is that I don't have a copy of this creepypasta because it was deleted.

Signed, PokeNerf


 * First of all, Pokepastas are blacklisted as per the rules. Even if that wasn't the case though, this still does not meet the quality standards, I'm afraid. The climax doesn't do anything, there is no buildup (straight to action then back out again) and the ending also is uninteresting. There is nothing scary or creepy or noteworthy in this. I'm sorry, but I have to decline this.


 * Also, I highly suggest you save your work on your computer before posting it online. MrDupin (talk) 21:28, October 12, 2016 (UTC)

The Man in the Mask
I know that there were no grammar or punctuation mistakes. I specifically went back and corrected these. I don't have a copy of the creepypasta, but if any administrator can give me an example of bad grammar or punctuation in my creepypasta then that would be greatly appreciated.

Signed, PokeNerf


 * Sorry for being forward here, but since I marked this for deletion, I feel I should tell you why this appeal is being turned down. Another admin is free to step in and repeal my critique if they want. I'm sorry, but with the three stories you've posted in the two days you've been active on this site, I'm wondering if maybe you're not spending the necessary time on them? Within two minutes of reading your story which was about a page long, I found a lot of issues.


 * Here's why I marked your story for deletion. "Generic story, frequent spelling ("It was re (red) and black in color, with black handlebars and a black seat.", "When I decided t (to) take a shortcut to school", etc.), wording (Awkward wording: "The one day that I walked to save money for whatever reason it may have been, there was this man following me.""), and punctuation ("My nightmare didn't stop there'(why apostrophize there) though", ""Congratulations, Jack(punctuation missing)" my headteacher said", etc.) issues." I also overlooked the capitalization issues present ("The worst part was that There (there) was no-one around at the time", "At best, I would encounter a police officer and i (I) could tell them about my experiences with that man.", etc). Overlooking those (and the other issues present), there were a lot of story problems present in your story.


 * Story issues: It feels like you neglected continuity in your story. The biker's eyes for example: "The only part of him that you could see was his deep crimson eyes." to "He wore a biker mask and his eyes were a deep shade of purple." If his eyes are changing color, why not mention it in the story and build on this fact. It feels like you didn't spend a lot of time re-reading this story to catch basic errors.


 * Story issues cont.: There's a real lack of description or explanation here. "He didn't care about being subtle anymore. He wanted me dead." What about the way he's pursuing the protagonist make it seem like he wants them dead? Remember, you are telling this story and you should try to make it involving and interesting. To neglect basic details that would enhance the plot/suspense really results in a flat story. "There was no-one around at the time, so screaming would've done nothing. If I hadn't made it to school at the time that I did, I would've been dead." Was there no one else at school during this time. He's going there for classes at around the same time everyone else is, why wouldn't people be present. Additionally you can't really just wave off them not asking for help or telling anyone at first as the motorbike chase implies (but doesn't describe) that the protagonist feels endangered. Who exactly gets chased/threatened and just decides to ignore it.


 * Story issues cont.: "After that day, I never saw him again, and I never intend to. Let's not meet again." This feels like you ripped this right from a Let's not meet post but spent little time building up the tension or horror of the situation. The benefits of those posts is that the story is believable and typically well-told. This really isn't. I'm sorry, but if you continue posting stories without spending time on them, your appeals are going to keep getting denied and eventually people are going to stop wanting to help you as it takes time to write these and you seem to have no intention on improving. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:18, October 13, 2016 (UTC)

Everlasting Dreams
I understand that my previous pastas were bland, predictable and short but I truly believe I have improved with this one.

First of all, although there is not much ofa plot, the story is attampting to explain what will happen if you don't wake up from a dream. I believe that this is a fairly original concept.

I don't have a copy of the pasta, so I apolagize for that. However, I looked through the pasta for spelling mistakes before uploading it. The only reason that I can think of why it doesn't meet the quality expectations is that it has no real plot.


 * You didn't sign your appeal, so as per the rules at the top of the page, this is denied. Read the rules before appealing next time.


 * But I remember your story, so I'll let you know why I deleted it. Even though I don't recall any grammatical mistakes, the story had no plot and the idea explored has been explored exactly the same way a hundred times. MrDupin (talk) 08:28, October 20, 2016 (UTC)

Breakfast
First of all, thanks for your time.

Hello, I am here to request the reuploading of my story. I think it meets the quality standards because it has a fast pace that doesn't linger too long before throwing in the surprise and hints at a larger story, allowing the reader to imagine what may have happened before the micro story begins. Here's the story:

Robert woke up and began to eat breakfast. As he did so, he looked out at the window on the ceiling. It was foggy, as always. Too foggy to go outside. He turned to his dog and said “Today’s the day.” After breakfast, he opened up a long, thin barrel and looked at the gun he had been working on. There were a few bullets on the side, ready for use, if he polished them a bit first. After breakfast, he did that. Once that was done, he looked at the ceiling window again. The fog was still there. Thanks to the bombs, it would be too poisonous to go outside for another hundred years ago. Robert hoped his dog could understand why this was best. He shot the dog, then himself.

Creeper50 (talk) 23:06, October 26, 2016 (UTC)Creeper50


 * I'm sorry, but there are quite a lot of issues here. Ignoring the mechanical ones ("He turned to his dog and said “Today’s the day.”" Awkward wording like: "Once that was done, he looked at the ceiling window (skylight) again" and flat lines: "After breakfast, he did that. Once that was done (it's unnecessarily focused on three times in a relatively short story.)" and "He shot the dog, then himself.") the story is not very involving. Your method of writing really saps any of the emotion/horror out of the situation. It feels really weak to ignore the hopelessness in the story (the man is killing himself and his dog as he sees no escape) and not really make the story emotional. Finally the story has a number of plot holes. First off, how does this guy have the materials to make a working gun ((gears. striking hammer, barrels capable of withstanding the initial triggering of the bullet) if he's trapped in the house? Second, why spend such a long time trying to make a possibly faulty gun if he's looking to die when there are probably a number of other means of doing the same thing? I'm sorry but this really doesn't work as flash fiction and if it's fleshed out into a full story, there are still a lot of issues so I'm turning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:05, October 27, 2016 (UTC)

Misunderstood
My other creepypastas had flaws. I undertstand that. This one, however, has none that I can see. A storyline (brief, but there), no cliches or not many cliches and a fairly new concept of the main character understanding the 'monster' instead of being purely scared of it. The only flaw that I can really find is that it doesn't have a very 'creepy' ending. Also, I am working on the picture of the creature mentioned in the story.

Here is the story: http://pastebin.com/b2gmRtEQ


 * As you keep making the same mistakes and just rush to the appeal without bothering to edit/spend time on your story, I’m going to do the same. I’m advising admins to turn down this appeal for “a number of mechanical issues (capitalization and punctuation again) plus story issues (rushed plot, lack of description, awkward dialogue) that leads this story to be below quality standards” At this point it seems like you’re not looking for advice so I’ll just leave it at this, your story had issues that you couldn’t be bothered to work on and it got deleted. The same will likely happen to your next story if you can’t be bothered to spend time on it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 18:20, October 27, 2016 (UTC)

Goku Black
Why did you delete it instantly? Did you just read the title and be like "NOPE IT'S STUPID"? It took me about 2 days to make that pasta. I used my best creativity to make the idea and plot, what was wrong?

This was my second pasta and now it is just gone. I am confused on why you did that, it had proper grammar, I checked everything. What one flaw i know is that some parts of the story don't make sense. But even if you won't bring it back, can I at least get back the final copy? You deleted my final copy with as much spelling and punctuation corrections I made.


 * Here is a copy of your story. I'm sorry, but you've overlooked quite a bit here and since the plot is very generic and subscribes to a lot of the common tropes of video game pastas, I'm going to turn down this appeal. As you haven't made any changes before rushing to the appeal and since I've already consulted the admins, I can only advise that you read this and take your next story to the writer's workshop (link in deletion message) as there are quite a lot of issues here.


 * Punctuation issues: Quotations missing from game and story titles. "Then the mission started with it being called Goku Black! Hurry before it's too late!", "After Black was announced as a playable character in Dragon Ball Xenoverse 2", etc. This is done to help differentiate it from the narrative itself. You also have a tendency to use periods when you should be connecting the sentences with commas. "Black then grabbed his body. Ripped out his lung and taking a bite out of it.", "Black picked up the Omni-King's heart and devoured it. Leaking purple blood every time he took a bite"


 * Awkward wording: "Then, a random person interfered the fight, and what I saw next made my blood frozen solid.", "I felt sick to myself and watched the rest of the cutscene.", ""Yes, more power, more bloodshed, MORE DESTRUCTION!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! THIS RACE WILL VANISH, I WILL MAKE MY JUSTICE!!!" These words had shown that Black may start to be going insane.", etc. I suggest reading the story aloud to yourself so you can catch instances of awkward/clunky wording before posting.


 * Miscellaneous Mechanical issues: "A (An) animated cutscene played and showed that he was somehow powering up against Goku and Vegeta", "Black started to laugh and squeeze his hands to The (the) point of blood bleeding out of them.", "Black then kept punching himself while saying(,/:) "Fighting will just make me stronger!"", etc. There are quite a lot more of these, but since a majority of the issues lie in the story, I'll be moving on to that rather than list everything that's wrong here.


 * Story issues: Remember, you are telling this to an audience that may have no clue about the DBZ universe and you need to explain more. Lines like this: "His combos were much more vicious looking. He even had his Aura Blade attack!" and "I was playing as Black instead of my character, and I was fighting against the Omni-King and his two guards, and my original Xenoverse 1 character." really do a poor job of creating an involving atmosphere as a person who's unfamiliar with the material won't be able to have that mental image. It also makes the story feel bland when there isn't description to paint a scene.


 * Cliches: Generic overuse of gore. "Black teleported behind him, and ripped off his head with his bare hands. With his blood and limbs flying out of his head. Black then grabbed his body. Ripped out his lung and taking a bite out of it." Hyper-realism. "Trunks was bleeding in a realistic type way, not just hyper-realistic, but more than what anime illustrators could draw." 'The game knows my name!' trope. "That's right Alexander, I am coming after you, to eat your heart, and your organs."


 * Story issues cont.: Couple everything I listed above with the fact that the story's extremely anti-climactic (The protagonist just smashes the computer after it mentions his name, really robbing the story of any attempt at a resolution or effective ending). I'm sorry, but this story feels really formulaic and since there are a lot of mechanical issues on top of that, I can say that I agree with LOLSKELETON's decision that this doesn't meet quality standards. I suggest using the writer's workshop as this is quite a bit to overlook. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 05:05, November 11, 2016 (UTC)

I'm just wondering, what was the reason my story was deleten?. And how can i improve it, i really want this one on the wiki. Thank you.


 * Appeal auto-denied for not following the header above. Also, if your story is anything like the message you just typed, the reason should be pretty obvious. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 18:10, November 13, 2016 (UTC)

Ashley the psychopath
I have noticed me issues on my pasta and fixed it, I'm sorry for not reading the quality standards before I posted I just really love creepy pastas and wanted to make one of my own, I know the name is a bit generic but I couldn't really find another name to really name it, I'd appericate it if you could contact me the issues so I can fix them (I've already fixed the grammar issues and the bad spelling, and the big wall of text, if there was anything other than that let me now, if not i've fixed them)

writer's workshop board post:

☀http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:563012


 * I'm sorry, but the story is still full of issues with punctuation/grammar/capitalization/wording/etc. Please read over our How to Write Creepypasta page, writing advice pages, style guide, and wait for feedback in the workshop. This story is far from meeting our quality standards and will need significant changes before it can be considered for another appeal.


 * Jay Ten (talk) 21:06, November 27, 2016 (UTC)

Deleted story that the author failed to follow the basic appeal directions for.
I don't understand why Nesigi's Dream was deleted.

The message I recieved stated it didn't fit the "horror level" or something along those lines. And it's not suposed to be some bloody murder thriller, it was intended to be pschological, mind numbing torture. Making the character slowly go insane, but not turn into some crazed killer...

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Nesigi%27s_dream


 * I gotta start this out with: What? Who told you that your story failed to 'fit the horror level'? Your story was deleted for failing to be up to our quality standards and not telling the story you intended to convey well (i.e. not being well-written). As you haven't changed anything since your previous message, I'm going to do the same and copy/paste my message on your talk page.


 * If I can weigh in for Psycho, as I was the one who marked it for review/deletion. Your story was deleted as it failed to meet both our quality standards and our standards for a well-written story. As you've made no edits to the story since posting this appeal I'm going to deny it outright. As for reasons as to why... Starting with the basics, you give absolutely no background to the original material which makes for an incredibly weak story. Look at Godzilla NES and Rhudaurion's: The Butcher's Nursery for two stories that effectively tell story while conveying background information. Your story is incredibly sparse on both fronts giving only minimal information which leads to an uninteresting story for both un-initiated readers and people who are familiar with the source material (as there's no detail to make the story interesting).


 * There's absolutely nothing for readers to attach themselves to any of these characters as the only thing you're really going for is name recognition and even then you aren't giving description or reason. In the end, this feels like you're giving us the cliff notes for a theory story that neglects to cite any of your sources or build on the premise you set. I suggest using the writer's workshop (included in the deletion message) as this story has a lot of fundamental issues that result in it being well below our quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 06:26, December 17, 2016 (UTC)


 * You didn't establish anything with this story.  It's a few sentences long, and doesn't have anything going slowly; rather the entire thing is over before it really started. It's a statement of premise and four "facts".  Nothing was established that indicated psychological horror, torture, or insanity.  It's pretty bland, even by VG pasta standards.  ClericofMadness (talk) 06:27, December 17, 2016 (UTC)

The story was called 'that damn puppet'
I'm not quite sure why it got deleted? I read the rules and I felt it was okay to post. It wasn't a trollpasta or anything, and I didn't feel it was cliche (I even added in a twist ending). I couldn't find any mistakes in my grammar or the coding and it wasn't incomplete or a wall of text. It was my own original concept and the puppet in the story is based on my own, so I wasn't intentionally ripping off another person's story.

The story is also here on my DA: ☀http://silvergriffinflare.deviantart.com/art/That-damn-puppet-652073370

Legend of Cynder Rush, dawn of the candy dragon (talk) 11:39, December 19, 2016 (UTC)


 * The main reasons were that it was a wall of text and the plot didn't really go anywhere or do anything. The twist ending was cheap and didn't add to the story in any meaningful way. The wording's occasionally awkward (he would take things from the fridge that I was planning on having for my tea, and without anything to eat I became hungry and desperate) and there's just nothing to this story. Next time, I recommend you put your story up on the workshop to get some feedback. For the most part the prose was alright but there's just nothing to this story, no real attempt to build atmosphere or imagery (a lot of telling, not showing). For what it's worth the core idea is interesting, and if you elaborate on it and build it into a proper story, I'd probably let it back on. But in its current state I don't feel that it meets the quality standards ChristianWallis (talk) 11:57, December 19, 2016 (UTC)


 * Edit: Also, while you might have broken the story up in your word processor it still wound up formatted on the wikia as a giant wall of text without any breaks ChristianWallis (talk) 12:06, December 19, 2016 (UTC)
 * Oh okay, thanks! ~

Sugar
I had noticed that my story, Sugar, was deleted. Now, I'm not about to sit and complain about how it's "unfair", but I merely want to ask how I can intend on improving it.

It's also worthy to note that the pasta was not intended to be a "video game fanfiction," as stated in the reason for it being deleted, but was actually centered around a fictional location intended to be in the real world. However, I can somewhat justify your actions, as the mill in the story was directly ripped from Left 4 Dead 2, as well as the presence of the pictures being video-game oriented and the crying being represented in the form of witches, however I'm fully obliged to take the photos down and rename the mill.

The story is supposed be primarily focused on the history of the Ducatel mill itself, not any other element of the Left 4 Dead series, with the exception of the ambient witch sounds, is utilized. It's also worthy to note that almost half of Ducatel's history was created by me, such as the creation and closure.

As I have stated before, the location and story is supposed to be set in the real world, NOT the video-game world. With all that being stated, I'd still love to see your criticism on the story. I'm all open for it.

--XenoNate (talk) 14:46, December 21, 2016 (UTC)

P.S. I also don't entirely like the idea of this being taken down within less than 24 hours. This move doesn't give any time for criticism to help me learn from mistakes and improve.


 * The story was deleted because it lacked any real plot, and the writing lacked any atmosphere or imagery. The story is split into one part exposition that offers only a vague outline of a place getting abandoned. The second part feels like a pretty close imitation of Abandoned by Disney and more importantly, almost nothing happens. Guy visits place, finds elevator, looks at grass, hears screams. Neither part works on their own, or together. I recommend going over the variousblogs and advice guides, and using the workshop to get feedback on your story while it's in progress. ChristianWallis (talk) 20:29, December 21, 2016 (UTC)