Talk:The Pier/@comment-43709140-20191231053551

I liked this one. A lot of modern poetry doesn't lend itself the best to storytelling the way prose does, at least in a traditional way. However, this freeform style of verse was the first exception that I have seen to that rule in a very long time. And, for that reason, I made an exception for it and was pleasantly surprised by how dark and intense the latter portion felt. It came upon you like waves on a quiet beach:  slowly bringing your attention in and out until a larger, more sudden force comes roaring in to strike you, grabbing your attention and dragging you out out with it -  before falling back, once again, to soft and quiet verses, leaving you stunned like you'd just seen a friend dragged out to sea.

That being said, I do hope that was the sort of feedback you were looking for, and you did a good job here.

I hope you don't mind, but I did a dramatic reading of this. If you wish for me to take it down, let me know, but I do hope you will give it a listen:  https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=swAWcDOVMII