Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10789912-20160103075745/@comment-25037895-20160124061054

Here's what I noticed (CTRL+F to find automatically):

" "Open your eyes, kiddo.(a comma to replace the period)" said the seemingly "

"beneath her digging into her bear (bare) knees,"

" she (She) could just make out his short"

"hilt of a machete, and but (butt) of a rifle"

" "some sort of saint?" she asked greatfully (gratefully)."

"She stayed quite (quiet), and took a step"