Talk:Thief/@comment-26007602-20150131210453

It works. A bit long, but it works fine.

I'd have to say that while the beginning is mostly devoid of tension, the rest of the story flows great. The level of description is perfect (without overstaying its welcome) and I like how the gore is used to enhance the experience, not generate shock value. Although the torture scene may have been pushing that a little; I didn't really see what it added to the story, as Rigaut recovers from it in the end anyways.

I enjoyed the concept, a "wall of art," but I feel like it could be expanded somehow. It's a nice reveal, but with all the build up to it, it doesn't really contribute much to the story, as the old dude tends to focus more on his lover instead of the wall.

Rigaut was a bit underdeveloped; there's no indication that he would be so full of vengeance as to nail the old man to the wall. I didn't really get a complete feel for the character, as he no chance to express his personality.

Neither of those matters in the story. I just wanted to find some things that I think could have been done better. It was a good read overall, and not quite long enough to bore the reader. Nice job.