Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35515534-20190605053523/@comment-35711173-20190605185743

Star Man,

I agree with everything the Wizard said except about the knife. I would take both to combat a monster.

This has more description than 6/2/2019, but not enough for a story. We need to FEEL what the emotions are and we need to be able to put ourselves into the scene. There isn't enough to do that with here. Is Tinkerbell a dog? What kind? What does that imply? If Tinkerbell is a small cat, that's one thing. If Tinkerbell is a 150 lbs Fila Hound, that's another. The kind of knife tells a LOT about the protagonist. Is it a boy scout pocket knife? Is it a dadao? Big difference, but they are both knives.

My impression at the end is that the protagonist is insane and killed Tinkerbell himself. Is that correct?