Talk:The He of the Night/@comment-1671931-20140510192204

Don't take this personal but I don't like this story much. It has a strange build-up, it all starts with a dream but don't get any further. I understand what you are trying to imply with the ending but it simply doesn't work. There is no tension in the story, no real fear, you try by letting people disappear but explains nothing. The Monster is nice but has no real purpose in the story. His role is too minor, nothing is explained. I advice you to read more creepypastas, to improve story development and especially tension build-up. You have good intentions but the result is sloppy. 3/10 :(