Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5239282-20140318010314/@comment-24077689-20140318182447

I like this very much. You have a couple of errors, as has already been pointed out. Easy fix.

My problem is with the end. It's not about the repetition. I kind of dig that stylistically, but it's more about clarity. It's all so rushed. He sleeps, tears out throat (presumably) and is reborn somewhere. There's stew. Where the rest of the story you're painfully clear on exactly what is happening the end is maddeningly vague.