Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33979162-20190724181519/@comment-35711173-20190729183233

Ggzz,

What I see is recording actions. Psychiatrists did these actions to Cat. Cat then did these actions.

Good writing is emotional. Instead of just telling us each event, make us feel each event. What was Cat experiencing at each point? While descriptions of the environment do help us, getting us to feel the emotions of the moment really is what helps.