Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-6822927-20190324172709/@comment-36627132-20190325122041

KingSparta300 wrote: So you're saying a lot of that should be cut? Some of that was supposed to set up later events, like the M1 Garand in Winslow's bedroom. That just can't come out of nowhere. Since I'm of the opinion the bully scene is tacked on, I find it pointless anyway.

As for the dialogue, we've got a lot tacked on here and there that not only adds nothing to the story, but also slows it down a bit.