Talk:Sever the Cord/@comment-26193563-20150913224447

Like many ritual pastas, this follows precise steps, and the rewards are great. This, in fact, does not stand out from the hundreds of similar styles on this wikia.

I'm not saying it's bad. In fact, it was rather enjoyable, but there are some flaws.

For example, when the story mentions about the God in the second dimension, it gets a bit confusing. So only a God in the second dimension? Then what about ours? What of all those religions? When we murder here, we still are soundly punished, yet the story says the God only exists in the second dimension? Why does he have no mirror? Overexcess details are dangerous, but so are few. Elaboration and backup to statements are crucial in every story.

The biggest mistake is the ritual itself. Closing the lights and focusing is completely uncreative. What makes rituals a do-not-to-do are the special steps in it. It is more suspenseful, and risky, when your life is threatened or hindered, and not just by turning lights off.

When you no longer see your Copy, what does your Copy do? Does it still mimic your moves? Think what you think? What does it do now, just stand there?

The cord idea was rather unique, something I haven't seen around here. The decaying possibility is freaky enough to NOT persuade people to do this ritual, which was pretty neat.

6/10. Lacks details regarding to the dimensions, the ritual too simple to be taken seriously.