Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37197096-20181116050426/@comment-36815674-20181116062205

NedWolfkin pretty much hit all the important parts. I think I say this a lot to others that are new to posting, the first few sentences is your chance to grab the reader. Seeing that you are young ill give it to you lightly.

Reading your first paragraph does not make me or anyone else want to keep going to find out what happens.

First sentence 👇

(It was a long, long time ago, when Amy Scarlett, a young 21 year old woman, married Matthew James.)

Make it where you want to keep reading. This is just me as a Narrator I'd drop the long, long time ago. Sounds like a Disney movie or Star Wars. Your job as the author is to grab the reader so there like what's going to happen next.

Take this info you get and use it to your knowledge.