Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4976667-20150617184026/@comment-26007602-20150618083632

Poetry is very strict on this site and needs to be done exceptionally well to pass. This has formatting issues (one line in between each line, no need to bold each word), lacks stanzas, and lacks meter. A poem doesn't need to rhyme, but there needs to be a flow to it. You've taken a bunch of sentences and arranged them into a poetry format. Additionally, there's no depth or deeper meaning to this poem; it doesn't make much sense and comes off as simply pretentious at times.

I don't like poetry (if that wasn't obvious), so I'll leave you with this. Hopefully it can better explain what could be improved in the poem. Best of luck.