Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30157838-20170208182455/@comment-28428152-20170211010913

I really enjoyed this. The vocabulary was great! The protagonist seems to me like some mashup of Scrooge, Stephen King, and Charlse Dickens.However, the first thing that stuck out were the anachronisms. It seems as though the story is meant to be set sometime in the late eighteenth hundreds, ariund the time of Dickens (judging by the spats, gloves, coat, tophat, and lantern-lit cobbled streets.) However, at this time nylon and polyester were not around yet (nylon was invented in 1935, and polyester was invented in 1941, but not manufactured until 1950), so it would be best to not mention those materials at all. Also, parchment was mostly replaced by paper in Europe during the 1200's, so you should just change the word parchment to paper. The second part if the story is very original as well, though descriptive clarity is somewhat compromised. I think that there you should go back and touch up the descriptions to make it less clunky. Otherwise, great job! Cant wait to see more