Talk:The Pursuit/@comment-27623698-20160213232202

A little cliche, definitely needs improvement, but still not a bad story. Never go into the deep dark scary cave. Also don't you think people living there would have notice a creppylooking cave. Also does it somehow make a cave everywhere it goes. And its not uncommon for diffrent religions to have the same being but with diffrent names, and minor tweeks. Liked the Roanoke refrence. Scarefactor: 4. Thrillfactor: 3. Cliche: 75%. Twists: 0.

Overall Score: 4-6