User talk:Banningk1979/Archive 11

Stain Upon Your Clean Page
Hiya. I've been dealing with some stuff and just trying to step back to give myself a breather. I hope all is well with you, especially your job. Sure, I love your writing! It'll take me a while though, I've promised Raidra and DarthWeezer that I'd read their stories first and still need to do that, so you are 3rd in line Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  07:22, July 24, 2016 (UTC)

If You Don't mind
So a while back I re-posted some stories from reddit but so far they've hardly had any exposure. So I was wondering if you could see them for yourself and give your thoughts.

Here are the stories.

Charles Robert Olevsky

Crown the Clown

The Pigeons Around Here Aren't Real

Thank you in advance.

(AB1997 (talk) 01:51, July 29, 2016 (UTC))

How are things?
I heard that there was a serious storm in New Orleans last night. Raidra (talk) 12:44, August 5, 2016 (UTC)
 * That's good! I had heard a report of tornadoes, so I didn't know how it was where you were. Here's hoping that this is the only kind of tornado you have to deal with.


 * It's my pleasure. Friends have to stick together, and you've been good to check in on Mom's health. Believe it or not, Mom had an outpatient procedure on one of her sinuses about a month ago (the removal of something called a complex mucus seal). I noted that having a procedure done on the foot and then later having a procedure done on the head seems like the textbook definition of "If it's not one thing, it's another." Thankfully that went well too. She felt sick that first week, but she's doing well. :-D Raidra (talk) 00:14, August 6, 2016 (UTC)

That's sure the truth
I was blessed with good parents. Dad passed in April 2002 (Remember to get those colonoscopies and other check-ups), but he's with us in spirit. I don't know if I ever mentioned this to you, but believe it or not, he was a Korean War veteran. Mom has a follow-up appointment with the foot doctor tomorrow afternoon. Since things have been going well, I'll hopefully have a good report to share tomorrow night. How about your family? How's everyone doing? Raidra (talk) 01:22, August 9, 2016 (UTC)
 * The news is good! The doctor liked Mom's progress so well that he said she doesn’t need to see him anymore unless there’s a problem. He told her she’s been taking good care of the area. :-D Thanks again for your support during anything! Raidra (talk) 00:04, August 10, 2016 (UTC)
 * Wow, we just missed each other there! I'm glad to hear about Neomi's promotion. Congratulations! Good luck to Tristan! I'm sad to hear about his bullying. Hopefully that isn't as big a problem this year, but either way I'm glad you're determined to take charge. Yeah, it's bad when the school can't bother to do anything. It's good to hear that things are going well overall. It's my pleasure. Raidra (talk) 00:10, August 10, 2016 (UTC)

It's been four years since I was last here and I'm still banned from chat for using the word "retard". KILLA THRILLA 4 (talk) 14:32, August 10, 2016 (UTC)

I have a third revision for my story, and I was wondering if an admin like you could go over it. I don't think they are any more grammitical errors. The original story was in Writer's Workshop under The Lake And The Woods.

I could post this revision as a reply?

Tide16 (talk)

Mantle Chapter 1
Hello. I just put out the first chapter of Mantle and am asking very specific people for their thoughts on it, so I can get some criticism as to how the plot is flowing and the writing style. Thank you for your time in reading this message, and thanks again if you choose to take a look.

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:552511 ShawnHowellsCP (talk) 18:18, August 22, 2016 (UTC)

Review
Hey man, I finally got around to reviewing your latest Tobit installment. You can find it on the article page. Sorry for taking so long. Anyways, it was a joy to read. Bravo. MrDupin (talk) 16:19, August 30, 2016 (UTC)

The Promise
It's been over a month since I promised you that I'd leave you feedback on one of your stories, I just wanted to stop by and let you know that I haven't forgotten, will do so, and apologize for the delay (been a hectic month). I'm going to be honest with you here and not pretend that it didn't happen: I did bump someone else's story ahead of reading yours, but I did this because it (Insula) was sitting in the Writer's Workshop as opposed onto the site proper and hadn't gotten a review based upon a full read. Your story is next, no matter what, and I should have it finished and reviewed by the end of next week :) Sorry that I've taken so long and thank you for your patience. I hope all has been well with you! Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  07:11, September 1, 2016 (UTC)

We're number three!
My understanding is you tied for third place in the contest, so if this were the Olympics, that would still be enough to medal, right?

I just wanted to give you an update. Mom went to the podiatrist today and he said everything looks good. :-D How is everyone down there? Raidra (talk) 00:26, September 3, 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks! You can imagine how happy and relieved we are. Speaking of medal winners and flooding, in one of the first episodes of The Late Show after Hurricane Sandy, David Letterman joked, "It was so wet and rainy today that Michael Phelps refused to come to work!" Seriously, though, I'm glad to hear things are going well. :-D


 * Take care, Raidra (talk) 01:16, September 4, 2016 (UTC)

Enjoy-They Hate us and Want Us to Die
I hope you enjoy my rendition of your story. https://youtu.be/4ZDtzJPs5KE KillaHawke1 (talk) 07:06, September 8, 2016 (UTC)

re: Awesome work
You are very welcome. I was hoping you wouldn't mind me infusing just a bit of humor into the story. It is so rare that I find an opportunity to use images of cats giving you the finger nowadays. KillaHawke1 (talk) 06:46, September 9, 2016 (UTC)

Hi,

I'm a journalist for the UK's largest horror site and I'm currently writing a series of features on the most iconic, frightening and culturally significant Creepypasta stories, later to be collected into an eBook

Here are a couple of examples to give you an idea of what I'm doing: http://www.ukhorrorscene.com/dark-web-steven-hickeys-essential-guide-to-creepypasta-part-17-penpal/

http://www.ukhorrorscene.com/dark-web-steven-hickeys-essential-guide-to-creepypasta-part-20-funnymouth/

I wondered if I might be able to ask you a few questions about your rewrite of Jeff the Killer?

Needless to say I would be more than happy to show you the chapter for your approval before publishing and would be sure to include all credits and links to any of your sites, plus references to any upcoming projects for which you might appreciate any additional publicity.

Thanks so much for taking the time to read this, I really do appreciate it.

Best wishes and kindest regards, Steve

MisterStuff (talk) 13:16, September 16, 2016 (UTC)

Critique/Review Request
Can you please give some feedback to my poem pasta "Fancy Meeting You Here?"

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Fancy_Meeting_You_Here

I'd really appreciate it.

EtherBot (talk) 08:22, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

RE: No Worries
Thanks!

EtherBot (talk) 08:45, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

No worries here either, thankfully
Mom went to the foot doctor last week. She has a friction blister on her right big toe, but they say it shouldn’t be an issue. She went to another doctor and got some medicine for it. It’s already looking better, so that’s a relief. She also picked up her special shoes last week, so things are going well. :-D Thank you as always for your well-wishes, and here's wishing the same to you and yours! Raidra (talk) 00:38, September 20, 2016 (UTC)
 * OUCH! :-0 I'm sorry to hear that. I hope you get well soon! At least you didn't do what this one mailman did. I forget if this were in the U.S. or Canada, but years ago there was a mailman who got high during his break and thought he had a great way to shorten his route. He went to a mailbox, dumped the contents of his bag into it, and went home. So yeah, the mail carrier tried to avoid delivering mail by trying to mail the mail. The next morning he got a call saying that he had two options- resign or face federal charges for interfering with the mail delivery. He chose the former, though if he had chosen the latter, the trial would have been interesting. The next time you receive coupons that have already expired, well, now you have an explanation as to how that might have happened.


 * I'm glad to hear the kids are all right! I hope things continue to go well.


 * The final chapter, eh? It should be gripping!


 * It's my pleasure. Have a good one! :-)


 * Best wishes, Raidra (talk) 01:14, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Thanks Man
Thanks for the support Banning. Much appreciated. MrDupin (talk) 14:03, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Bad mailman! No biscuit!
I wonder how long the guy's co-workers had to work to undo what he'd done. "Hey, this mail looks familiar... Dang it, Matt!"

Earlier today I realized that it's possible that dog hated you and wanted you to die. Raidra (talk) 00:12, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Perusal pending
I saw the news so I’ve copied the story onto a word file to peruse when I can. Like last time I’ll review it in parts so I don’t get eyestrain/headaches. Sometime later I’ll do the same for “The Demon Tobit of Delphia” and “Tobit: The Bleeding Sky” so I’ll have the whole series covered. Hopefully the final installment will get better reaction than a recent Pokemon episode- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zUNrZMBQKtQ (This video gets repetitive at the end, but there were a couple parts that made me laugh out loud). Raidra (talk) 00:06, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Review in five parts
Parts 1-3- I’m liking this so far. I thought it was funny how the reporter was described as having canned fear because there really are times when you watch reporters and wonder, “What is wrong with you?” “Scientists currently have no explanation for the rain of flaming hairballs. In entertainment news…” “What is wrong with you?” I do think it’s interesting how people ignored the star until it started inducing violence. I wonder how Lisa, that snobby psychologist, and all the naysayers feel now. The scientist and the DHS agent came across as jerks (since one said he didn’t care about the violence and the other didn’t care about the bloody messages, even though she should have had some thought about them), but I liked the scientific jargon and the description of the mysterious star properties, and the agent was sadly right about literature having inspired violence (The Oklahoma City Bombing was inspired by a warped book called The Turner Diaries, which painted domestic terrorist attacks as necessary to save America. Sick stuff. On a somewhat related note, I appreciate how you refer to terrorists as terrorists and don't do this whole "Oh, they're so misunderstood!" spiel that some people are doing nowadays). The description of the star seeming to drive people mad had a Lovecraftian feel to it. I wasn’t familiar with that Bible story since Pentecostals don’t follow the Catholic Apocrypha, but the information and the various perspectives were interesting.

I especially loved how you’re tying all your stories together. :-D A couple of them I haven’t read, but I know enough about your work to recognize the references anyway. They weren’t following searching and handcuffing protocol at that station, were they? For those who know what degloving means that scene was a gruesome moment, simple yet graphic. It’s a fine example of understated and effective horror. Jackson’s line about adding battery to assault was funny. There’s that supernatural turf war element going on too.

Pinky really did give an eff-you to Gregory, didn’t he? The emotions were realistic and relatable, as was the friendship between Clair, Trevor, and Derrick. Hector’s pain and death was one of the saddest scenes of this whole series. Raidra (talk) 00:32, September 25, 2016 (UTC)
 * Parts 4-6- The descriptions (the River Walk, Gregory getting blackjacked, etc.) were great. That part with the bum gauntlet and the fiends was like a really bad haunted house attraction (and I mean that in a good way). When it talked about Gregory wanting the oil rights, I thought, "Are you kidding me?" I can understand it, but Gregory's a jerk (though it appears his love for his brother remains, since he gave Trevor the room with no hesitation and without being asked). He seems like a fool at this point (Did you not think your uncle would be miffed by what you did?), but I know things may not be what they seem. For instance, Lena seems like a despicable back-stabber now, but that might not be the case. Therefore I won't talk about anything else right now. I'll see what unfolds next. Raidra (talk) 00:26, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Parts 7-9- Ooh, mystery boxes! That should be fun. Gregory, you got played, fool! I especially enjoyed Brandon's speech, the paragraph contrasting Trevor and Gregory, and the look into Trevor's mind. Rest in peace, Trevor. Raidra (talk) 01:15, September 27, 2016 (UTC)
 * Parts 10-12- Part ten was a very sad one. Derrick's Sergio chant was especially moving. Gregory's joke about going back to sleep was pretty funny.


 * This story suddenly became an action movie (and that's just a comment, not a complaint). I don't think Gregory needed to be told to shoot Tabitha. Ah, Lena, I knew you wouldn't let us down! I knew my trust in you was justified. Good night, sweet princess. Soka had bad caretakers, but that was for the best since her presence helped in the battle. Al and Maria, yay!


 * Clair was smart to enlist Janice and Christopher, and the two had a beautiful end. Parts 10-12 were both action-packed and emotional. It's hard to balance intense and quiet moments, but you did it. Raidra (talk) 01:00, September 28, 2016 (UTC)
 * Oh, and Al's comment about them coming with their own toothpicks was great black humor too. Raidra (talk) 01:04, September 28, 2016 (UTC)

Parts 13-15- First the negative. Recently the YouTube channel Anime America had a clip summing up fan reaction to Black Butler 2. It showed a clip from the ending and then cut to a couple reviewers shouting, “BOOO! That’s about a million boos!” That’s my reaction to Lacy being alive. I won’t lie, though. I did wonder what had happened to the baby she’d killed, and I can get why you brought her back as a cult leader. She might not have the same power that Pinky and Tabitha wielded, but that doesn’t mean she and her followers can’t do a lot of damage. This shows that evil acts and groups can have lasting effects (like the Nazis and neo-Nazis in the real world). Wait, you were trying to make a point and not just mucking with the fans, right? I’m just going to preserve the friendship and say it was the former. ;-) Hey, it’s not like she’d been partying that whole time. She’ll get hers in the end, just like Pinky did.

He’s their beloved son, but they are not at all pleased. I hope you don’t take this the wrong way, but part thirteen made me think of that episode of Futurama in which the Star Trek cast got abducted by a powerful force that turned out to be just a fanboy living in his mother’s basement. It also brought to mind various comic books with pantheons of “omnipotent” characters. It’s unsettling that there’s a whole bunch of these things out there. Just to be straight, Hyraaq is the first one to be the result of sex, correct? Basically this was a story of a child gone astray due to bad influences and his parents just letting it happen until after a ton of damage had been done. Sadly this is something that happens all too often in the real world, and sometimes the consequences are devastating. Soka will be a good influence and friend for him. It was interesting that Pinky’s influence was just letting people surrender to their base instincts, and it was very satisfying to see him sobbing and begging before being sent to the Red Star. I think we’ve all met people who break down into messes whenever they have to face the consequences for what they’ve done. I loved the respect Clair and Derrick showed for their dead loved ones. All in all, this was a great ending to this series. Great job! Raidra (talk) 00:28, September 29, 2016 (UTC)

~blushes and smiles while making dismissive gesture~
I was happy to do it. Have a good night! Raidra (talk) 03:14, September 29, 2016 (UTC)

The Tobit Review of Raidra
It was interesting to learn the inspiration for these stories. Derrick having a premonition dream was interesting too, and it made sense since other supernatural events were described in the various stories in the series. You read about the plans these friends have and you think, “You poor saps…” You’d think that even if you haven’t read anything else in the series because 1) it’s the first part of a horror story and 2) there were elements of an urban legend (The fact that they were planning an outing between life stages reminds me of one in particular, but that’s for another time). Other elements appeared throughout the story (the protagonists making plans, people knowing things they shouldn’t know, a protagonist being warned, and a protagonist ignoring a warning not to look at something). The thought of there being other gates into Delphia is alarming. Well, Timothy’s First Officer doomed them all for arrogant reasons. It’s interesting to read about Lance’s sermons and the Tobit legends in light of what I now know about the Tobit cult. Those poor harvest victims…

I enjoyed the first person perspective for this one, and there’s something I found especially praiseworthy (which is why I’m dedicating a separate paragraph to it). This started with subtle horror, definite signs that something was wrong. The first parts of this were great psychological horror. If the story had ended with Derrick on the drifting boat after Sergio’s suicide, and there were no supernatural elements whatsoever, this would have been a great stand-alone horror story, and that’s an achievement. Raidra (talk) 00:38, October 4, 2016 (UTC)
 * "For Love and Hot Chocolate" was actually the first story of yours that I read. Go to the bottom of the comment section and you'll see my review (The fact that I posted my review in the comments section lets you know how long ago it was ;-)).
 * Here’s that urban legend I promised. This guy is in the barracks telling his comrades about how he and a couple of his friends decided to have one last wild night before reporting to the draft board. One of the friends, Johnny, was acting especially reckless. He zoomed along on his motorcycle, did tricks, and tried to unsettle the others, which was especially dangerous since it was a foggy night. Johnny decided it would be funny to zoom up ahead, then turn around and drive between his friends’ motorcycles. While he was up ahead, a truck passed the other two without him knowing. Johnny turned around, riding the wrong way down the lane, and spotted a pair of headlights. He thought they were from his friends’ motorcycles and prepared to drive between them, and he discovered too late that they were the headlights of a big rig. The storyteller concluded, “The thing is, we thought that Johnny was talking about cocktails when he said he wanted to get smashed before being drafted.” Raidra (talk) 00:09, October 5, 2016 (UTC)

Raidra: The Reading Reviewer
This was a good opening to the series, and as you'll see, there's a lot I found interesting. I liked Clair wanting to create her own branch of history and not just create extensions of other people's accomplishments. I felt bad for her when she was laughed at, mocked, and hassled, those biased scientists throwing fits and acting like they were so much better than her. I enjoyed the relationship that she had with Redbay, though she had a good relationship with all of them. Allens was a real jerk at first, but he came around. It was interesting to note that the stone could have easily wound up in some museum, its significance unrealized. I think that happens a lot in archeology, art, etc. From time to time you hear about some important artifact, work of art, manuscript, or fossil found in some mundane place where it had been stowed away or overlooked for years.

When it noted the scientists were done, I thought, "They don't know the half of it!" I thought the hallucinations and home invasions were great horror, subtle yet terrifying. I agree with Clair that the thought of someone in your home unscrewing the light bulbs and disabling the phoone as you sleep, preparing to terrorize you, is horrifying.

I found Epor's journal to be really interesting. Epor was sort of like the Clair of his day, and the ancient story seemed contemporary. I thought it was interesting that the book was so well-preserved. Epor's people obviously had impressive powers and abilities, though it wasn't enough to save them. Raidra (talk) 00:45, October 6, 2016 (UTC)

Consent Request
Hello Mr. Banning,

I am a big fan, I know that some of your stories have already been read by some of the more well known names on youtube and other sources but I would love to narrate some or one of your amazing creations. I am a fairly new narrator to youtube (only been narrating for about 5 months) but within that time I had the awesome experience of being a hired voice actor for Chilling Tales for Dark Nights. I would like to read your story "Secret Bar" on either my personal page or to narrate and submit it to CTFDN to post on their page. I will be on two of their shows and possibly more, for now at minimum two.

I would like to know if I could receive consent to narrate your story "Secret Bar"? I plan on enlisting other talents as to not just have a single video using one voice so it should be interesting. If you have any other stories you would be OK with me reading as well I would love to take a crack at it. Please if you have the time check out my personal youtube page at youtube.com/eversoocreepy and feel free to contact me at theescproject@gmail.com regarding my request.

I look forward to your reply,

Eversoocreepy (talk) 20:08, October 14, 2016 (UTC)

Take Care

HBE

Celebrating good times
Yesterday Mom went in for a check-up and they liked what they saw. Today she celebrated a milestone birthday (I’m not saying which one because it isn’t polite to reveal ages like that). This past Saturday my brother and his wife took us out to eat to celebrate, so we had a good time. Thankfully things are going well. Hopefully things are going well with you all, and you haven't been bitten by any more fearsome beasts. I just had a thought. I don't follow the series, but I'd hate to imagine what the postal carriers in the Harry Potter world have to face. Then again, maybe that's why they use owls to carry messages.

I was originally just going to share this video with Vroom, but I decided it was just too wonderful. Behold the glory of weird Japanese capsule toys! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QjbrKYJeGdc Raidra (talk) 23:54, November 1, 2016 (UTC)
 * That's good to hear! Best wishes to you too. :-) Raidra (talk) 00:54, November 3, 2016 (UTC)

Email
Hey, Banning! Got a question that I didn't want to blast over the wiki. Any chance you've go an email address I could hit up?

Shadowswimmer77 (talk) 20:21, November 2, 2016 (UTC)

Feedback Request
Hey Banningk

I was wondering if you'd check out one of my stories in the writers workshop and give me some feedback. I sort of wrote it all in one go and it's not really good enough to be uploaded. But I don't want to just abandon the story because I'm really really happy with elements of it. There are more detailed on the page in the link, (and of course the story is there too)

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:561941

Thanks in advance,

EtherBot (talk) 13:45, November 17, 2016 (UTC)

A little something for you
http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Raidra/Happy_Thanksgiving,_my_friends Raidra (talk) 15:08, November 24, 2016 (UTC)

Happy Birthday
Congrats on surviving another year. Have a good one, ya creepy old bastard.

Jay Ten (talk) 14:01, December 5, 2016 (UTC)
 * Whenever people talk about birthdays, I find myself thinking of this clip- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ifToNGo2A-w (Hopefully this doesn't look like the one that attacked you). Here's hoping you and yours have a great one! Raidra (talk) 23:45, December 5, 2016 (UTC)