Talk:Walk Through the Forest/@comment-25103775-20140726145827

If you wanted the news report, it should've been at the end. The guy's dead, he can't write anymore. Or you could've put it at the start, adding "The journal was given to his family", and then a family member reading it or something like that.

Besides this, the man's stupid. Not for praying instead of looking for a way out (Though it would've been better if he had done both, obviously). I mean, yeah, maybe the water wasn't clean. So what? Before I die of dehydration, I'd drink the filthiest water I've ever seen if there was nothing else. Then, he had his journal and a pen with him; if he went hunting, he probably also had a knife and knew how to make a fire. He could've tried to use something as a cup (I think you can fold tree bark in a fitting shape, or he could've tried using some animal parts like the bladder or the stomach) and heat it over a fire. The water wouldn't be perfectly clean, obviously, but a lot better then death, I'd guess.

Overall, you should think a little bit more. The main character just seemed rather stupid to me. And, well, he got mugged, but why did that keep him from remembering where the trail was? Couldn't he at least have remembered the rough direction and then start walking?