Talk:Silver Rain/@comment-5733573-20181217205701

This is very good. I'm impressed with your ability to create a very clear and cohesive fantasy world in such a short amount of time. A fantastical tale like this is an unusual find here on the wiki, but a welcome, one in my opinion. Really nice work!

I have one mechanical criticism: your use of dashes seems a bit inconsistent, which leads to some slight sloppiness, so I would go in and clean that up. Apart from that, this is a very strong story.