Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37855860-20181223154634/@comment-9041013-20181224195216

I don't see much going on here, so I suggest you complete the whole story and then submit it for review here.

From what I could gather the driver isn't quite normal so he's gonna drive the story, or have a connection to the driving force - you've flashed it a little too much, a little to early. Make him less obvious if anything.

Also, altering the aesthetic of the text (bolding, italic, etc...) just makes it seem as if you can't convey emotions through your words and its really unconvincing if anything. I won't get scared if I read "THE MONSTER IS ABOUT TO TEAR ME INTO PIECES AAAAAH"