Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25073641-20151031060700/@comment-27123781-20151102064802

A lot of what I noticed, Thomas already pointed out. Though I see this as a documentation of a specific incident. I assumed something similar to this was happened across the world to all of humanity, this was simply how it happened for this small group of people.

Everyone freaking out early really made it hard for me to keep reading, I started to skim over parts and keep an eye out for god's text. I feel like in a real chat room people might mock it more rather than be afraid or intimidated. I really liked how you brought out the sins and how they approached each person with an example of their corruption, or pointed out that there was too much to describe.

I agree with others who believe god should be a stronger character in this. Personally I might have him give them a slight chance, something to show that they have any sort of humanity left. As his last bit of hope dwindles, the sins come out. I feel like the 7 sins play out in this story like the 4 horsemen of the apocalypse which is pretty cool.

Anyway, this was a really cool idea and it got a lot better as it went on. This is all just my personal opinion, do what feels right. I'm going to stop now before I ramble too much xD.