Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20160413174929/@comment-4893169-20160418201735

Thank you so much Jake for looking over my latest work--2412 E Cochran Rd. Wow! I didn't know about a bit of Guillermo Del Toro vibe going here. I'm trying to follow your advice about putting in more of a buildup and suspense here. I seemed to think my monsters have more of a M. R. James influence than Guillermo Del Toro; I've only seen three of his movies--Mimic and Cronus, and one where he did the screenplay--Don't Be Afraid of the Dark.  Maybe I can have the Lisa character have a momentary vision/hallucination where she sees the original bathroom before it got remodeled and then she sees the creature's hand slowing pulling open the shower curtain.