Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24759772-20141011033308/@comment-24821182-20141011084821

The last paragraph could be split into two. The part near the ending where the message saying the simulation has ended could be its own tiny paragraph as well. Remember to add the missing "t" I mentioned in the first post, and the apostrophes should be added where necessary as well.

There's some lack of punctuation here and there, such as a missing period between "10:25" and "Were" in the sentence: "The boy carefully looked around, and the clock changed to 10:25 Were the nightmares over?"