Talk:Queen Justine and the Cutest Little Shing/@comment-25941663-20150920235849

Is Reynolds the "upper-management dick" hitting on Beth, Derrick Reynolds from the Tobit series?

When Craig is interrogated, he uses proper dialogue to explain what is being said in his stories, something that rarely happens in real life and didn't sound natural. Of course, that's a tiny nitpick and it would be very difficult to do any other way, but I thought I'd bring this up.

I will also agree with Jay that the conversation with the daughter didn't sound natural. It felt like the daughter was much younger than she actually was.

I loved the pace of the story. I don't know why, but something just worked. It always kept me on edge. The format of the story served the plot very well too. It added something very real to it, and it all felt like it was happening in front of my eyes.

That ending really made it for me. It was very suspenseful and filled with action and pace. Very powerful. It was also unexpected. I was thinking that the next one to die wouldn't be the artist, but Drexler.

Also, for what it's worth, for a couple of moments I felt like Lombardi was the artist. Just thought I should bring it up.

By the way, I don't understand why the artist was a target? Why did she have to die? I don't see how her death helped the organisation. Maybe I missed something. Also, why did Justine write "SHING"? I thought she was describing why someone had to die. It did make for a nice ending, but I'm not sure it makes that much sense.

Overall, this was an amazing and unique read. Well done.