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SoPretentious wrote: [The ones are grandfather's claimed they'd seen] -- "our" grandfather's.

I think the ideas in the beginning alter drastically to the ideas in the end. At first I thought the story was about the government. It seems as though, those two ideas aren't really connected.

I thought the alien figure was a government agent of some sort. I just don't think the story transitions well. But, with some work it could be accomplished.

Really? I'm pretty certain they do connect. Especially the doctor scenario (hence, they implanted a device into each person to alter perception.) I should alter the pylons part though and make that one more clear though.