Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24191206-20140410182103/@comment-24800590-20140410233348

Ah, I see. I assumed it was more than a week because of: "...I've lost track after the first week or two."

That's what threw me off about the timeframe, you should definitely look into clarifying that a bit further.

In reference to point #2, the reason I gave it the possibility of being an animal of some sort is that before that point you've described it through sounds like scratching and pacing, which could mean just about anything. If you included some detail that doesn't fit the common animal mold, like perhaps the sound of a massive form moving around, or something completely out of the ordinary, like clicking sounds or something, it would seem more feasible that it's a monster and not just a coked up raccoon.

I see your point about choosing not to view the thing out of fear; that's perfectly plausible.

On the subject of fear, I found the change of heart at the end (deciding to challenge the thing to a battle) a bit sudden considering how afraid the main character was previously. My understanding is that the main character elected to stand and fight while the thing was still outside his closed window (if it was opened it wasn't depicted in the text).

If you included some more details to give the impression of being "cornered" and forced to fight, it would make much more sense.

That's all that comes to mind for now. Good luck!