Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28040424-20160323171231/@comment-28040424-20160325113346

Thanks JohnathanNash, and yeah my native language is not English. I just write this story to see opinions, I know that I need to add a lot of stuff to it to actually be something creepier(if this is a word) and I need to better my grammar. Just wanted to see opinions how to make it.