Talk:Investigation One/@comment-25340844-20140910234412

I'd remove the bit at the beginning stating that the story isn't true but is based on real events. Half the fun is pretending these pastas are true, and nothing kills the mood like a helpful note at the beginning of the piece reminding the reader it's fiction.

As for the story itself; it started off promisingly enough, but once you got to the action, i.e. the actual scary part, you rushed through it. Describe it more; how were the people in the video reacting? How were the beings reacting? How did you feel while watching it? I felt cheated out of a proper ending, to be honest.

Now, how about telling one of us where we can see that movie?