Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27726836-20160315161839

So this is a creepypasta i'm working on and this isn't the final version by far. I just started on it today and i  thought i would share what i made so far by the way the ending i plan for the finished story has a twist i don't THINK has been used. This is just the very beggining of the story and it may not stay exactly like this.

Creepypasta starts here:

I woke up my freind was sitting beside me in the plane. "Emily! Were about to land its about time you got up!" Christy said. We were going to a town called Oakwood Ridge it was really popular at the time. "Sorry Christy." I replied hearing the flight attendee say were about to launch a few moments later. When we got out of the plane we ammediatly rushed to our vacation home and started unpacking. "Hey Christy which one of us is cooking tonight?" I asked not remembering who we agreed would cook specific days of the week while the other cooked every other day of the week. "I'm pretty sure i'm supposed to tonight you cook tommarow." She replied. A few hours later we walked to the mall. "So this is the new mall they built here?" I said. "I heard it was built over a lab that was burned down by masked men years ago. The word is that it was most likely terrorists." Christy said right before we walked inside. "Its so big!" I looked around and started running towards a cafe Christy walking over to it at a even pace. As i was running i knocked down a boy with a few bandages on his face and a scar on his arm i quickly apoligized and helped him up. I asked him if he was ok all he said was he was alright and i continued running to the cafe after giving him a few dollars as a apology since he looked round the age of 6.

Creepypasta ends here:

So what did you think to cliche? Pretty good? Meh? 