Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33937557-20180620224644/@comment-34823985-20180622050738

So, I've read it again, and I still don't have any issues with your story. It's a fun read. I was going to nitpick a couple of lines just for the sake of being a bit critical since this is the WW, but I decided against it. This story works for me.

The sinister intentions of the antagonist creep up slowly. It's expected that something sinister is coming, but your story suspends that for a while. This is well executed in my opinion. Congrats on this one. I haven't read your story about the rats yet, but this is your best work so far, in my opinion.