Talk:Still Not Over/@comment-24730066-20150708061942

I didn't really enjoy this. In certain places the punctuation was pretty bad (too many commas, to few periods) and the phrasing was SUPER awkward. You just DON'T compare a monster's appearance to the Simpsons and Nigel Thornberry and then expect to keep a scary/dramatic tone. To be honest near the end of the story I actually thought it had become a comedy and was surprised to see a serious ending. Pacing was meh and there were numerous cliches.

5/10

Nevertheless, good try. I hope you realize this is an effort to provide constructive criticism, not to hate on you.