Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26070273-20150410071039/@comment-25230922-20150410233401

Here we have what happens when you don't watch what you are doing! On a serious note, grammar. There are way too many commas. Some of those commas need made into separate sentences or replaced with semicolons.

I don't think you realize how nightmares work. Most people who have nightmares start during NREM sleep. Therefore, it is extremely easy to remember most nightmares and events within bad dreams. Saying "I can't remember" and leaving it at that seems lazy and effectively makes the dream irrelevant to the plot. (Someone oversleeping from this kind of event would be a rarity in itself.

Also, where did the character fall? If it's such a life-threatening injury, that can taken in more than one way. Either your character has a weak skull or they were dumb enough to attempt walking down stairs while trying to put pants on. Either way, the logical side of me gives no sympathy.

Also, your final sentence seems awkward. The phone beeps the end of what in the background? The timer? My life? My shower? Justify this.