Talk:Spider Cannibals/@comment-4715955-20170805203756

I'm iffy about the final entry. The story is great up to that point: it starts with the usual mundanity of a journal and quickly sucks the reader in before bad stuff starts happening. The monsters are truly awful and I found myself really rooting for the narrator.

But the finale somehow just doesn't read right. I'm not sure what it is, but it comes off as corny. I feel like a few short panicked blurbs implying what's happening would be more effective than all the details and cheesy descriptions we're given. It would feel more natural.

Really nice work though. Thoroughly enjoyed this one.