Talk:War-Torn/@comment-26030957-20150605210559/@comment-26326346-20150605212809

I'm glad you liked it, it was really hard to write. I don't know much about Agent Orange, I could be incredibly cheap and say that perhaps it wasn't Agent Orange as they had believed, but that would be a dirty lie XD

I got the description for looking at pictures and this one on Wikipedia in particular helped lead me to describe the Agent Orange effect of leaving people red, blistered and bald: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Agent_Orange#Effects_on_the_Vietnamese_people (It's the picture of the Major). Maybe I just misunderstood the article or the picture is wrong? I'll have to do some more research on Agent Orange before I decide whether or not to change this.

The North Korean thing was a typo which has now been fixed, thank you for spotting it. It slipped through my proofreads and is an embarrassing error on my part.

I'm sorry that the ending wasn't satisfying as that is the most important part of any story, in my opinion. I wanted to have this pasta grounded in reality to the best of my ability. I really wanted to try to show the struggle that people who have served might go through and I didn't want to over do it. I do like the idea of him being haunted by seeing the woman every time he dreams and I might add that in, but if I do it'll be after the contest ends (I want to see how far my own ideas can carry me).

Thank you very much for all of the feedback and for reading :) I am really sorry that the ending fell flat for you. This was extremely hard to write because Vietnam was never covered in my education and I was trying to be as delicate as possible so as to not come across as disrespectful or inadvertently disrespect any who served.

I originally had a different ending in mind to where Fynn told the therapist that his grandson was being sent to fight in Iraq "God help him, he's only nineteen," but I ended up removing it for fear of people thinking that I might be trying to draw parallels between Vietnam and Iraq.