Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-8412271-20151121022823/@comment-26425680-20151121233331

So I read your story, and I found it very difficult to get through. In addition to what Empy pointed out, it's guilty of one of the most common gaming pasta sins... it assumes that the reader has some sort of preexisting knowledge of the game. Maybe within your circle of friends everybody is familiar with Amnesia, but for me, it may as well have been written in French for all I understood of it. Keep in mind that the readers here have all sorts of differing interests, so basing a pasta on something this specific is going to alienate many of us. A good pasta is one that speaks to everyone, not just a certain subset of people. If you're still dead-set on seeing this pasta get posted someplace, you should find a fan fiction site that specializes in these things. CPwiki is not the appropriate forum for this piece.