Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27027028-20160119193623/@comment-26715482-20160120041852

This story has so many flaws, where to begin?

The kids somehow avoided guardian programs and orphanages. (How?)

You're telling us that a 11 year old made enough money from pickpocketing to afford to pay the house taxes, food, and other essentials?

Than to say he was never caught?

What was the point of the gun? Seems forced in for shock factor. (Which it doesn't acheive.)

Why was the sister murdered? It's not explained and had no build up what so ever.

Gore for the sake of gore, I assumed the gun would have been used as a plot device to pin the murder on the main character, but that doesn't seems the case when the sister gets murdered in a over the top way.