Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24719047-20140322171640/@comment-24719047-20140323015627

Thank you for responding, I will go through and remove all those ellipses, someone else said the same the other day, I will fix that. As for the "bad guy", I was trying to go for a lurking character, that is always there, always watching. Yea I know it is a bit cliched, but this story was made from some of my personal fears. When I was younger I was absolutely terrified of the dark, I always felt as if there was something watching me, no matter how small or big the shadow, It always felt like someone was watching.

Now as for this being tedious to read, should I just shorten it, or actually go into detail at some points? Honestly this whole story was created for a contest I entered, and some people liked it so I was trying to get some ways to improve it. Sorry if this annoyed the fuck outta you, I was really trying but I guess I tried to hard. Thanks for the tips I will use them to improve this story, or maybe start something new.