User blog comment:FNAFTest/Just wrote my first story!/@comment-26831122-20171201194739/@comment-24101790-20171201200358

Here's a copy of your story. I would suggest proof-reading it and spending a little more time to actually flesh out the concept as it's one that's been addressed a number of times before (Simulated Children, Playing God, NPC, Role Playing Games, etc. and your version feels like it's missing explanation/focus. There are about a half-a-dozen stories like this on our wiki alone and your rendition feels incredibly bare-bones.

Besides the punctuation ("But what if life is a life sim.(?)"), frequent fragmented sentences ("The unexplained.", "Unthought about.", "Just one of many examples(punctuation missing)", etc.), and general asides that tend to distract from the plot as it doesn't lead to anything in the story itself. The story also feels like it's in its early infancy and the explanation doesn't hold much water or make a believable story. Giving one example without any real follow-up isn't very engaging or interesting.

I hope you take this time to take a little feedback and spend some time revising instead of throwing a temper-tantrum.