Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30157838-20190616010020/@comment-9041013-20190616093956

Oh that's nice.

You do have to work on the formatting mostly though, at the beginning you switch to colloquialism without quotes which makes it seem out of place. So fix that.

Also, I'm gonna guess you wanted to italize or bold the text wherever you place * *, the site has an option for that, under the text box.

The plot itself is pretty decent, I don't have much to say about that. I thought it's going to go the route of Pet Cemetery where the rabit just comes back to life and freaks the brothers out, but it turned out different and it works nice. So... yeah, work on the formating, the registers and I guess overall re check your English just in case and that's about it.