Talk:Jeff the Killer 2015/@comment-31288135-20170414094252

Honestly, I don't know why this is getting so much praise.

First off, it's needlessly long. There are so many unnecessary details and pointless bits. It would've definitely benefited from a better editor.

Second, Jeff's injuries make literally no sense. The white eye is most similar to what you would see in a chemical burn, which makes no sense if you were burned by a flare gun. Also, the scarring makes little sense.

Third, dropping a flare gun isn't going to make it go off. Guns have to undergo drop tests in order help prevent accidents.

Fourth, the setting is very confusing. No clear time is established. Jeff goes to a video store and it mentions pagers, which might suggest it takes place in the 90s, but then the author should've mentioned that.

Fifth, everyone is written completely unrealistically. The parents switch from being bitchy suburban parents to flat out abusive with no care for anyone but themselves with no clear transition. Liu has no purpose in the story and is just there because he existed in the original story. Jeff randomly snaps and starts killing people (and before you say it, no, the "syrup" is not a good metaphor, and no, it's not at all a justification for killing people) out of nowhere. The bullies are cliched and uninteresting.

Sixth, the entire thing is told in a very stilted way. Very little of the dialogue feels natural, and the uncomfortable sort of exposition the narration provides is so awkward in its phrasing.

Unlike the original where it was very clearly written by a young child who clearly didn't understand how to write on a technical level, this is what happens when a writer gets too cocky. The reason I say this is because many of the problems aren't spawned from a lack of understanding, it's clearly a lack of effort. The author clearly has a much better grasp on how to write, but the clear lack of effort placed into the story is why it ended up failing so miserably.

1/10, would never read again.