Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24881886-20140501211340/@comment-24550863-20140504080842

Here goes.

I love your story. It is very original. The main is very realistic. You have a great way to describe each scene and how the main thinks, made me get a bit of a chill. Great Job :)

However, the ending, how did the main know what happened? It was mentioned that there were no results on the internet. I suggest you leave out the parts from "When this crone kiled" to the end. Try to find a different way to end it. That part was the only one that bothered me.

Also, there are many grammer mistakes. But I can help with that if you want. Just tell me on my talk page.

Anyhow, this is a really good creepypasta. :)

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