Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26272407-20150502130946/@comment-24450775-20150502180745

Bad formatting, nermous missing words, confusing designations, and awkward syntax.

For example:

One day I broke my headphones. I was really disgusted, because they had been offered to me by my sister. I promised him I never would get rid. I loved him very much, but hey, since the accident, I stop speak to her. I threw the headphones in the trash and I bought new, light blue, small enough. They were similar to those that had offered me my sister. I hoped she would not notice that I had changed. I've had for 15 euros is given for headphones like these: the sound quality is exceptional and cushions perfectly match the shape of the ear. '''Is the narrator talking about his sister or a guy? Line three just stops abruptly. Line four does the him/her mistake again. '''

The bizarre things started in the path to home. I had the impression of being followed and I felt a warm current in my neck. Yet it was rather cold that day. I was probably paranoid. When I got home, I tried my new headphones. One word: PERFECT. But gradually as the days passed, the sound became more and more horrible. I planned to return them to the store, but before doing so, I've changed my mind without really knowing why.

A month later, when I left university to go home, I began to walk by putting my headphones. I knew that when I get back home, no one would talk to me. In fact, no one would talk to anyone. But I knew they would look at me strangely, as if it was my fault. This is the first time it happens, and it will happen again next year, the same day. But that does not matter, they'll talk to me tomorrow. They still love me.

'''This paragraph doesn't make any sense at all. '''

'''There are other issues, this was just for example. I'm sorry, this needs a lot of work to make it presentable. '''