Talk:The True Meaning of Loneliness/@comment-24281984-20150104203241

This was really meh. It reads much more like an actual story than a blog post, so I think it would probably be better off as one than one where the narrator dies at the end of the story. The gore seemed kind of pointless and since we had no reason to care about Brooke or the dog, I wasn't shocked by it at all.

The rest of the story wasn't much better- the huge wall of dialogue felt more like something a frustrated teenager would write on their blog rather than what they would actually speak. Why didn't the MC interrupt his monologue at any point to ask what was going on? And the ending in particular doesn't seem very well-thought-out at all. Is this a story about murder or about weird things crawling around or someone's spiral into insanity?

All in all, I don't think I'll find myself reading this one again. There isn't really anything new, the story barely even seems to progress at all, and there's no character depth or even desciptive details to draw the reader in. It's only just meeting the QS and a rewrite seems like a very good idea.