Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26365586-20150514035325/@comment-26007602-20150514222816

First off, once you remove the double spaced lines, this doesn't seem too lengthy. As long as the tests you describe are interesting and well though out, no one will mind reading them.

I didn't really mean to touch on the tortured child complex; my point was that the monster shouldn't be the center of the story. We need more interactions from our narrator as opposed to him simply describing what happened. No one likes a bystander.

I don't think the fact that Ouranyx has exposed organs will shock a lot of readers; were too hardened to stuff like that. You need to be creepier in the ways he moves around and interacts with the populace.

As for how to edit on the Writers Workshop, there should be a little edit tab at the bottom right hand corner of your post if I'm not mistaken.