Talk:Occupied Chimney/@comment-5733573-20180605163804

Well, everyone below seems to like this story. Unfortunately, I'm going to have to disagree. The idea and plot are great, but they're very poorly executed. So many awkward sentences, so many unecessary details. The way some of the events are describe completely takes the air and suspense out of the story. All that said, the plot was very clearly envisioned, and I enjoyed the climax of the story.