Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24059312-20140626180605/@comment-24304936-20140626223020

Thanks. I try.

Anyway, my criticism wasn't trying to be insulting. I was just letting you know from an outside perspective, that it:

A) Is cliche B) Doesn't meet our quality standards.

Don't give up. Just try researching some writing guides and try to develop a better story.