Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20160605205320/@comment-27012445-20160606145857

Thank you very much for you feedback and compliments on my writing style. While I can see your point on the level of creep this story may contain since there is a huge gap on what one finds as creepy and the other doesn’t. I would have to disagree with it being predicable with no twists or thought to provoke content. If you allowed, I would like an opportunity to get you to reconsider your position.

Let’s say you had a dream. In that dream, you were dying, and seven winged creatures stood around you whispering in your head. Behind them, in the darkness, things were moving and trying to get past them. You realize if these are angels, then there must be a Heaven, and then there has to be a Hell.

Moments before your death, you realized the angels are giving you an opportunity enter heaven despite the life you lived or the religion you followed. You accept their proposition. You die. You go to Heaven.

You realize you were tricked. Seeking redemption on your death bed is the greatest of all sins. You realize you will spend eternity with the people who have hurt you so much. They never said sorry or did anything to make right what they did wrong to you. Yet, all they had to do was ask for forgiveness at their time of death. Just like you did.

Would you or would you not wake up creeped out?