Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35515534-20190605053523/@comment-35515534-20190607233338

DrBobSmith wrote: The Eight Years Ago section doesn't even sound like it was written by the same person in the present day section. The language is much smoother in the earlier section.

I don't feel insanity in either section. The first section sounds like the kid may have been bullied or have other reasons for avoiding his peers. The second one sounds like a dream that was written up. I get a feeling for stupid, not necessarily insane. There's nothing saying that he was crazy. No little hints of medication, not taking medication, no other phenomena in his head, no anxiety, no voices, etc.

A pole lamp against some unknown creature that can take down a cat? I sure wouldn't use it. Not effective enough to take down an animal that size before the thing would inflict major damage on me.

Except for tears, there is no hint of emotion in the second section. No anger, no fear, no need for revenge.

I can see the end as the bottomless pits of insanity, but you need to work it to get there. The trip will be worth it though. I changed the ending, I wrote over 20 versions of the 'insane' ending. And each time, it came out wrong. So I changed it,