Talk:Lovely Assistant/@comment-5000412-20141211222631

I feel like this story, although being brief, is hiding too much. There is a clear relationship between this assistant and the narrator, but one that comes off feeling very undeveloped.

I can say that I enjoyed the essence of it, though. The line that mentioned "normal people" was rather striking, as it was a single sentence that explained the narrator's position well. The story is rather short as it is, so it should spend less time using abstract feelings, and put more focus on this assistant and her significance (as well as the background of the narrator). Right now, it says and paraphrases "bitch" way too much. I get that the narrator's angry. I don't get his motivation and reasoning, however.

-E