Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26360765-20150501135627/@comment-24450775-20150501154835

You're going for the unexpectedly alone trope I assume. The tone is right, but the writing is hurried, puctuation issues, and it's crazy short. For this to work it has to be longer so you can let the dread build up. Speaking of, you need to give a reason for dread to exist in the first place.

Just remember, the hairy hand on the light switch is your punchline, not the story itself.