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SoPretentious wrote: As an idea, this would probably work.

Add more details. I really like how you changed the drops from rain to blood (so add detail to that also). Try to make the gore quick and intense. These are just a few of my thoughts. I have no clue if this helps. Thanks for your thoughts!

And yes, I will add a lot of detail when / if I write the actual story. And of course, I would stop the story when the kid sees his mom dead. And the death will surely be quick, shocking, intense, and gruesome. >:D

Thanks again. :D