Talk:No One Lives Forever/@comment-4620507-20131107035450

What's this? Feels in a pasta?

Plot: 10/10

A well-thought out plot that surprisingly tells a story spanning some time without boring the reader. Well done.

Originality: 11/10

I haven't seen ghosts implemented in this way before and I've never felt for the main character so much as this one made me feel for the narrator.

Writing: 8/10

The writing was good, but nothing really stood out from it.

Ending: 7/10

Its aim was good- I GET what's going on in the ending. The man's hearing the voice of the child that never was, that never will be. But... it just doesn't have enough bang to it. It just says, "here's the ending to a great pasta." And that's about it. It doesn't expand, it doesn't add to the atmosphere- it's just there.

Overall experience:11/10

I have to say, if the author was planning to make the reader feel for the characters, then they succeeded. I really felt it when the unnamed (I also like the fact that the author didn't introduce the wife by her name- instead, by her qualities) wife died, and I was the narrator after the death. Feeliest pasta on this site? I'm sure there's another one that has feels such as this one, but so far, this is a pasta that successfully tells a story- and a creepy one, at that.

Final score: 47/50

Oh yus.