Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190324160434/@comment-35911608-20190324180132

It's not ready in its current state, I believe. The writing itself is fine, I couldn't pick out any mechanical issues. What I don't feel is the creepysauce - melting trees. Okay. I need more. It's definitely weird, but the whole selling point for the story is in those last two paragraphs. Good tension building with Derek mentioning that he does this, but it didn't really pay off in my opinion. I'd definitely add more, it could be interesting, but it's really not ready yet.