Talk:The Great Lie/@comment-5733573-20181017140525

The idea is interesting, but the execution needs a lot of clean-up. There are many awkward sentences, tense shifts, and dropped words. Also, "thy" means "your." The whole thing could really stand to be smoother, which comes with taking a bit more time with a story. Not a bad concept and plot, though. I appreciate the historical element and a "nothingness after death" tale is always unsettling.