Talk:The Hound Walks in Dreams/@comment-25941663-20200219104849

Not a bad read, but I believe it is lacking some 'punch'. It is nicely written, with some nice visuals, especially for how short it is.

I think the description of the dog is lacking a tiny bit. Even though I like how you left the face up to the readers' imagination, you left it too abstract. A sentence describing in vague terms how the face was mangled would have gone a long way. Right now we do not have much to draw on, we need a more concrete direction to let our imaginations run loose.

Also, the ending was a bit too vague for my taste as well. Did the man do it (in a werewolf-like trance), or did the hound 'escape' the dreamworld to wreak havoc? In either case, I would have liked one more little detail. For example, maybe the narrator spots some blood in his hands/beddings/mouth (if they did it), or maybe he catches a whiff of the hound's odor (if the dog did it).

Overall though, an interesting short read. Kudos!