Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26011836-20161210184326/@comment-26011836-20161219232102

Thanks Dupes! I came up with a more original description for the protagonist's appearance at the end of the story. Here's what I got: (There, in the mirror, I noticed that my body was mostly covered in auburn coloured fur save for the bottom half of my face and upper body, which were a cream colour. Not only that, but in the middle of my forehead was a large tuft of fur that looked like a tear drop with a curl in the center. My ears were huge and shaped like elongated eggs with large patches of orange fur taking up a good chunk of them. My hands were shaped like mittens and a zigzagged line ran across the area between my chest and legs. I couldn't believe the sight before my eyes, even though it was staring me in the face! As I leaned closer into the mirror, I caught sight of something moving back and forth behind me. The sight startled me, almost costing my balance on the sink and I fell back against the mirror. To my surprise, I realized that the thing behind me was a thin tail with an arrowhead shaped tip on the end.)

Not only that but I fixed one of the plot holes you mentioned (the part where you said Pokemon don't talk). I'll still be correcting some of the other things you brought up and I'll take a look at that dialogue page you mentioned.