Talk:Beautiful People/@comment-26888887-20150909192033

This was a great read. I was sucked into the story right up until the sentence "He thought of killing them all, but was too lazy to dig all them graves in one go." Really? Now I just picture some redneck in the woods of Tennessee somewhere and everything is a lot less scary. Fix that wording, and this story will be perfect. I still really enjoyed reading it!