User blog comment:MSPHM/First Blog Post :)/@comment-24733988-20140421103553

To begin with, the title is brilliant. Really, REALLY, brilliant.

The story however, is not.

It lacks soul, there are spelling problems, a weird ending, the story is more melancholic than scary, but it is all in all a quite boring read.

However, if you work hard enough, you could make a very good story, I could even offer help, if you need it.