Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5239282-20140807153534/@comment-9967354-20140807161601

I'm not a terribly good judge of poetry. I like the setting you've created here, though: the city at its worst, etc. However, it did occur to me that the setting is all there is. Then descriptive poems can be absolutely lovely, but it all comes down to whether you want it to be one.

In my opinion, this poem in particular could have done without the rhyming scheme. The rhymes seem a little forced to me. Free verse would have given you the liberty to write so much more, or less, that I wonder what the poem would have been if you'd used it.

Back to the content, I think it could be expressed better. It's a nice idea, of course, but most of what you've written isn't something one can visualize very well. And when it comes to something descriptive, the writer should be able to draw more comparisons and inspirations from what he/she observes. That is all.