Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36530255-20181207204647/@comment-9041013-20181208004311

The English is very scrambled, it feels like a bunch of unrelated sentences placed together. The tenses are kind of weird and it felt as if you are switching between past and present. It just was weird to read.

As for the plot; one guy sees something staring at his window, gets worried and then scared as it approaches, nice.

Second guy has the same experience(?) and then the first guy kills him... what? How the hell is this supposed to work?

Is the first man seeing the second and misinterpreting his shape as a monster while the same happens with the second from the outside towards the first guy only to be killed by the misunderstanding of the first man? This is really confusing.