Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10319977-20160102141602/@comment-10319977-20160109175531

I did my best to show, rather than tell. To be honest I never thought I had a probelm in this area so the style of the new, changed walking-down-the-road paragraph (full of imagery such as sky color, etc.) is new for me. I'd like to know if it's an improvement or not.