Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35826115-20190629165428/@comment-35711173-20190629192144

Vvmaxplays,

The paragraphs are better. People who want to read it actually can figure out what the story line is.

Did you run a spelling and grammar check?

Please register at https://www.grammarly.com and run your story through. You will find nine non-premium or "free" errors. One error doesn't apply because of your use of a non-standard word, but eight do. Time to fix that story up.

You should keep your edits to the one you first posted. If you hover your mouse around the lower right corner of your story, you will see "More." Click on that and you will see "Edit."