Talk:The Creep/@comment-9967354-20140326135612

I liked the ending, actually, but most of the story was poorly written. The gore and note at the end were rather unnecessary. You can improve this by making her character a little more interesting, and deep. Right now, she just reminds me of a fragile little barbie doll who is too stupid to survive a killer. Add a struggle, some action, rather than her talking to a crazy guy on the phone. Keep the bit with the police short; it's almost as long as the story.