Talk:A Lovely Plant/@comment-4715955-20140312091959

Three major issues with this otherwise creepy and horrifying concept. (1) Once he discovers the plant is hollow, he shouldn't immediately dismiss it, especially after hearing all the noises, and especially after it makes the same eggshell-crack that he'd heard before, when he also heard the footsteps on his house. You've made him stupid for the sake of the plot, which is a cardinal horror sin. (2) The description of the bugs burrowing into him is a convoluted mess. Proofread it, expand it, break it into more paragraphs. It's the horror climax and it deserves more than a wall of clumsy text. (3) What happens if the next garden-owner has the more realistic reaction of "taking offense?" If somebody helped themselves to my garden I'd be pissed: who knows what this weird mystery plant is doing to the soil! It could ruin my tomato plants! First thing I'd do is tear it out (and discover what it really is prematurely).