Talk:On a Lonesome Road/@comment-25052433-20140816060636

Excellent use of grammar and wordage. Good descriptions of everything. I liked the way you developed both plot and scene.

Honestly I just wasn't sure what this one was supposed to be about. This story seemed to have a lot of moving pieces that never really came together.

The mailbox, the sun being unseen, I kept waiting for this to tie in to the story, but it never seemed to. Maybe I missed something though.

Either way, it was a fun read and well written.

6.5/10