Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29969337-20161104130817/@comment-30402176-20161109215326

Not bad. Not bad at all!

One more thing - just a personal touch; I think it would be better if you broke the story into paragraphs; allow there to be space that divide each paragraphs from the next.

I say this because I've heard that editors of this site are very draconian, and have been known to delete pages that they deem to be "poor quality" - and the most common reason, based on what I've seen, is due to the formatting (How the text is presented).

Split the text into paragraphs separated by space (they can be either long or short), and I'd say you're good to go! Best of luck!