Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25012337-20140531211538/@comment-24821182-20140601150553

I had made a little list of things to comment on about the revision, but the last few lines make me wonder if you're even interested in continuing to work on this story. Look, once the story has been edited to meet grammatical standards and some inconsistencies taken care of, I'm sure it will be worth a read.

I'm going to give you what I wrote anyway:

You accidentally wrote putted as the past tense of put when you wrote, "They putted the materials..."

At one point, you write "I and Rodrigo" when it should be "Rodrigo and I".

Despite the story being written in past tense, you write a bunch of the verbs in present tense (asks, does, says were some of the words I spotted).

You forgot to put a thought in ''cursive. ''There should be a transition between the miners talking and the police showing up. There is also still a formatting error with one of the lines, and you can correct it by going into source mode.

I've spotted a number of other grammatical issues, but I'll post those only if you care about continuing.