Talk:It Spoke to Me in My Husband's Voice/@comment-6064672-20150917190408

This isn't the worst creepypasta I've read, but it has a few flaws.

First of all, there is no creep factor when the evil entity speaks to you in your husband's voice.....since you spoiled it for us in the title.

"This was frustrating, but we didn't attribute it to anything paranormal at first. My husband explained it away as a defective toilet-paper holder..."

Does her husband have even a basic grasp on physics? How would there be a faulty toilet-paper holder that undoes an entire roll for lulz? Damn, those people at Charmin love a good trolling.

"He explained the situation and politely asked..."

We're in the past tense. And just like magic...

"The guy stares at him like he is crazy."

Yay! Now we're in the present tense! Seriously, why is sticking to the same tense so hard for creepypasta authors? I know that these writers are a WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY far cry from anything resembling professional writers, but this is stuff that you should know by the time you reach the 7th grade.

"The guy suddenly looks very alarmed."

And now we're back in the past tense. Perhaps this keep happening because the servers for the Creepypasta Wiki are located in Marty McFly's DeLorean.

"I had just turned off my bedside lamp and was laying there with my eyes closed, relishing the silence, when I heard footsteps in the kitchen. Once again, the footsteps stopped at the door of my bedroom, which was standing open. 'Hey, Tara,' I heard my husband whisper from the doorway. "

Right off the bat, I know this isn't going to be the husband. Why? Because the title told us so.

Anyway, this isn't bad. These are some pointers that I would take into account next time you write a pasta. Avoid dumb or melodramatic protagonists (sometimes they're both), tense swaps, and giving away your big reveal in the title next time.