Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26097843-20150220005535/@comment-26094927-20150220034528

Okay here we go let's review:

1. Scratch out the first three paragraphs or just heavily modify them. The "true story" humbo jumbo and the writer to reader thing is stupid. Just get to the point.

2. A kid drowned in the 30s... How original.

3. This story is named the paper people and only the last few paragraphs are about the paper people.

4. What does the grey monster have to do with them?

5. It being in a forest kinda pokes at me a little bit but it's okay.

6. Why are they so evil?

7. WAIT! Paper people? Woopdy doo.

8. Oh nu im gonna be ded

Sorry if I'm kinda harsh but i'm just trying to help. The character is kinda bland and the climax is well... unclimatic. I saw scrap it or edit the shit out of it.