Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36299239-20190304064951/@comment-36627132-20190304073301

First off, the title is an obvious play on My Little Pony which actually led me to believe, before reading it, that this was going to end up being either a lost episode or a trollpasta.

I'm sorry but this story is just one cliche on top of another. In fact I've counted XXXX cliches in this story.

1) The main character being a fan for something from their childhood.

2) The main character recieves a message from someone who has something of the thing they are a fan of.

3) The above trope added with "it was never released".

4) Main character is skeptical about buying but does it anyway.

5) Main character leaves object and returns to find it has moved.

6) There being no trace of the person who sold the main character the object.

7) Taking place on a message board for exposition.

8) Main character has violent nightmares concerning the object that the story is about.

9) I'm not sure if this is where you were going with this, but having the pony be "deep, crimson red" sounds like "red like blood" cliche.

The story itself isn't even creepy and almost lengthly. The ending of this kind of reminded me of the ending of Sonic.exe.

And final note, ellipsis is three periods and a space.