Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27859657-20161211233350/@comment-31020499-20170115231252

Another rewrite to show what I mean:

Nice to just hang you / (Can't blame it on you) / As in the Old West / Gunshots a reflex / A quick end to / Quickening / End to pain / End to bickering / A slick end to / A twisted rope / In me

...poems take shortcuts &, like riddles, let the reader work for it. Give us images & gut-level sensations instead of abstract words like "because" & "blame." Hope you stick around to give us more of your heart!