Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26268104-20151026230119/@comment-27012445-20151027004705

I love ritual pastas. The instructional method of telling a story was so cool to me, but like everything it became an over traveled road that eventually restricted any future stories in that format from being successful unless it brought something new and fresh to the style. I think your problem is sticking too close to the ritual pasta formula with a very familiar plot line of demon summoning and consequences of the summoning or incorrect summoning. The article-like portions are good, but it doesn't blend well with the overall narrative. It feels out of place and awkward in how it is just inserted at the end like it should be part of an entirely separate story. My very first pasta was a ritual and I really struggled with these same issues and I like to think my story was somewhat successful in making something unique in this writing style. The Sounding of the Fifth Trumpet