Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26373253-20150625202138/@comment-26475800-20150627232640

I know that, and you used that perspective well, the only thing that I was saying is that you shouldn't kill off the person telling the story. Although, when you ended it with the person being killed, you did switch the writing style, which is a plus.

First person perspective is a wonderful way to write, and you do it well. So let me start by saying that, I wasn't trying to tell you not to write the way that you did, because that would be a terrible suggestion.

Leaving everything vague is fine if there is going to be more to the story, like latter additions, but if it is a stand along then you should leave less to the reader, in terms of how this man had been injured, who had hunt him if anyone, how did he get into the situation he was in when he woke up.

All of these could be developed as the story progresses, this would be great for an intro to a novel or much longer story where the cops have to find the answers to these questions. Sure you can be vague with some details, but the way that nothing had been answered at the end of the story is a rather disappointing, to me at least. You build up such a good mystery, you should reward your readers with at least some answers at the end of the story.

You could also make this story longer and leave the answers at different points through out the rest. It would leave people with some closure.

I don't want to come off like I didn't like your story, because that is not the case, or that I think the way you have written this was bad, which it was not. I really like the idea of this story and how you have written it. The only thing I think it needs is some more answers.

But this is your story, write it how you would like to. If you feel like something is going to work well use it. Write what you find interesting and others will find it interesting as well. You have a talent for building tension and making mystery, which is really important in writing. This last paragraph I wrote is the most important suggest I can give you.