Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26873355-20150811044128/@comment-26399604-20150813034649

Minor grammatical errors I noticed:

+In the second paragraph, "The bullying had become [too] much..."

+In the fourth paragraph, last sentence, "...reveal something that I wake [too] quickly to truly...

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Now as for the story goes...kudos to you. Despite already catching the hint of who the narrator was, I enjoyed the feelings and thoughts from their perspective. It was an enjoyable story to read. Oddly enough, I found myself wanting more when I reached the end. It almost feels like you could continue the story for a few more events, not saying you have to, but it's what I felt in particular.

If you do decide to do so, you should continue in the direction based on it's written now and where the character is going in this newly obtained mindset without fully reaching a true end, almost how you left it if that makes sense.

Nonetheless, I enjoyed the story and would love to read more of it. Good job!