Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25012337-20140520232253/@comment-25012337-20140521231626

Thank you all for the replies. I'm planning to make so significant changes in the story.

I'm planning to remove every single part after the dancing club meeting. I'm going to make the story more faithful to the song,and the devil nonsense will be removed,and deaths will appear not so early like that. Just one day after "finishing" the story I already noticed how bad it was the middle of the story.