Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25170312-20140718014948/@comment-25148755-20140718021439

I like the concept, its definitely unique. Noticed a couple minor spelling errors but nothing too crazy.

Melissa finding him by noticing the marks on the trees is pretty weak. The woods weren't one of his normal places to go so there's little reason for her to be looking for him there. Also, there's nothing to tie him to the marks (unless each tree said "Jason was here" or something) so there'd be no particular reason for her to follow them. You may want to come up with something else. Cops have the means to triangulate your cell phone signal so maybe she uses that somehow. Or maybe he has a conversation with her before he is so far gone and mentions the library he found which would at least give her the idea to suspect he might be there.

Your style is still the same, but you've avoided most of the flow issues I had with your first Follower story so kudos.

All in all a nice little piece of work.