Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25547916-20150731172119/@comment-26475800-20150731225909

I would say it is to do that you didn't give any names. Use the name of the person as the present, and the future and past can remain the same. It would make it easier to know who is talking. I could have also become a little confused because I was casing children while trying to read this. I just reread what I was a little confused on and it read clearer this time, but you should still give a name to clear things up.

When you say, past is talking or present is talking, yadda yadda, it becomes confusing and detached from the story. If you gave a name to present and used past it would be a little better. You can also use the description of the version of the person to identify them better then past and future.

I may be nitpicking, but I do feel that would make the story a little better.