Talk:Kagome Kagome/@comment-5242638-20140727080841

Even if they had to perform these experiments outside of Germany, considering the intent of the experiments I find it hard to believe they would not perform them on their own people. And that they would not have to pass some sort of evaluation to be entered in the trial. I mean if you wanna make someone immortal and you think you can you wouldn't try on some mangy orphans, especially considering there's a war going on, and this could be Germany's ace in the hole, I think it'd be more realistic if it said the experiments were performed on their own soldiers or at least their own people.But putting that aside though, a red haired Japanese girl with heterochromia? This screams Mary Sue. It really ruined the immersion for me. If you had said blonde I might've believed it. Even blonde with blue eyes. But red hair and heterochromia? The rarest hair type topped off with one of the rarest eye conditions?! What else? Blue skin?

My last point is first is says "Just follow the instructions and you will survive" but then it says

"I really can't explain any further. No one ever lives to tell the tale of what happens then."

How would you know what happens before that but not after that? If no one lives to tell the tale of what happens next how would the tale of what happens before end up on the internet? Especially since that bit is in first person which implies either the narator experienced this or has word of someone who did and unless they survived they couldn't've told them about it. It's all just cliche creepy sentences bunched together that don't add up when put together. "This happened to a friend of a friend of mine" would've been more believable.