Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20180217215030/@comment-9041013-20180218121156

Icydice wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote: Good work, over all.

A lot of psychology involved, I kept feeling Jung, Freud and a LOT of Peterson from you there. Look them up, might help you with further developing the characters and solving the conflict at stake here.

You do contradict yourself in the sense that the AI doesn't feel yet still feel, in a very humanlike sense. He doesn't feel whatever you find "burdening" to feel, I guess but feels pleasure... a lot of it, he is basically sadistic, which is not supposed to be possible for a being without a biological, fully neurologically wired body. so I suggest you add some word or something to highlight how it's the idea of "feeling good" that is there, rather than the sensations themselves. Ah, I get it. Yea, I prob should do that

Any other suggestions? I hope this stacks up well to the original for you. It does, the transition from an innocent Jesus AI to a megalomeniacal Hitler with a god complex AI is pretty smooth. ​You've also played on the "God acts in mysterious ways" in regards to the other programm.

Suggestions? keep the light mood in regards to the dark themes, l enjoyed the way the murders were just an occurance, they did not matter to me as a reader, what mattered is that they happened.

Also, I know this story is most likely going to end in a Cathartic state, but as a brooding reader, I'd rather seeing my horror stories end in a bad way. This is up to you though and we'll see whats coming ;D