Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25825682-20150513020103/@comment-25825682-20150521052619

It was more than helpful, I'll continue the revisions. I'll say Arnold's death was just the introduce the antagonist, but I'll involve the antagonist more in section 3. As for the description, I thought too much would take away the imagination, but I'll add a bit more to it when I can.