Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26981815-20151014040429/@comment-27012445-20151014144512

This could use some work on the wording and the flow of the narrative is kind of choppy making for a slightly awkward read. The diary commentary is borderline believable and could be executed better with something like a cell video. this is only a personal opinion, but I don't like pastas that end with the protagonist succumbing to the villian. I find it much more rewarding and challenging to the author to find a way to have justice be given. But again thats only my opinion. Really wasnt feeling this one and had no strong attachment to the characters. Im sorry