Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24115679-20140606204320/@comment-25089042-20140622045823

In one word: creepy. Got chills on those last few paragraphs.

I wouldn't worry about the length; it had just enough build up imo. Any less might subtract from the creepiness factor the story holds pretty well.

I don't get though how the sound of keys would make the rickety-click sound. I imagine keys to sound more like cling-clank which is pretty far from the sound of creaking joints. It's a minor thing, but it distracted me towards the end.

You are a damn good writer and I'd love it if you'd be able to give comments on my own creepypasta. (Quid pro quo: I scratch your back, you scratch mine?)

Here: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:331580