User blog comment:Tin77/My Horrible Confession/@comment-26268104-20160403152131

Don't worry. I hate the story, but I think you can improve. You have plenty of critique to go off of, and I actually might have some knowlege to impart on how to make characters.

Here's some advice to get you started:


 * Go ahead and give characters some hobbies that don't contribute to the story. (called activities) These add color to the characters, making them interesting.


 * Give some thought into what a character's room or house looks like. If your house is full of, say, Mario posters, I'll assume you like Mario.


 * Characters talk differently depending on who their with. If I'm talking to a new hire at the place where I work, I'll probably be stern or something along those lines. I likely won't use that tone when talking to my boss, though.


 * Give the characters a careful balence of strengths and flaws. Examples of strengths inculde having knowledge in a certain subject. (Writing, mechanics, politics) Flaws can inculde a phobia, disability, past trauma or obsession.


 * Lastly, don't outright say a character has these qualities. Make them implied through what the character says and does. For example, I am describing a character who likes retro video games. I won't say "He likes tetris." I would say "When I walked into the room, he was lying on the couch and pounding at his game controller. On the screen, the game being played was tetris."

There, I hope those tips help you, and bye. Contact me on my talk page for more advice.