Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25944811-20150105190309/@comment-25825682-20150106164856

I can't deny it is short, short to the point it explains little. Instead try to put more hints of the main characters fear of what's under the bed, like he would often check it or something. Or maybe say the stalker has a personal connection to the protagonist, like a brother or sister, cousin this is optional.

As for the cliche thing, much like a hollywood movie or japanese anime, a horror story is bound to make some resemblance to another, but don't let that discourage you.

Just mold the similarities into your fashion, so it can kind of break from the mold. As far as the run-on sentences, there are several programs to download that can help you, I even got one that explains why.