Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5101683-20180927063906

This poem is very good. It is the best poem. Please rate it according to these words (because it will fail most surely). I will come by tomorrow. Thank you. Enjoy.

He felt a tremor in his feeble mind

He realized that the work was never kind.

{He had forgotten common people’s work.}

He was of pure blood, not of mongrel breed.

He partook not of meth, of dope, of weed.

And yet he sat, he sat and felt berserk.

He was not brave. His tremors and his shakes

Would rouse the sleeping man to gladly wake

{He could not understand the sweetened praise.}

He often wished for purpose in his life

Yet he would flee from sadness and from strife,

Wither from some unassuming gaze.

He pined for something in the sleepless night

He pined for sleep! And yet with all his might

He brought himself to heights he could not stand.

He could not see his mind made manifest.

Mere words would gladly dance at his behest,

But thoughts! No, thoughts were something far too grand.

He wanted blood to drink and cheese to shun.

This kind of wordplay struck him as being fun,

This wordplay only he would understand.

He wanted to be better than he was,

But those were words to him, more like a buzz

Than promise, or than meat which he’d consume.

There was no love inside his bitter heart

He looked at things with apathy, unscarred

By all the things of which he’d safe presume.

He had no love inside him, not an ounce.

Not even when he walked or when he bounced

Upon his feet, a fighter at the ring.

He looked like he would complement the world.

But when his soul like parchment was unfurled

One found it clear that all he’d do was sing.

He has to look upon a beauteous poem

It is the normal work, the commoner’s tome

And yet he looks and likes not what he sees

He cannot not understand the swimming words

They speak to him, their voices quite absurd.

They are the words of poets, not of bees!

And he will gladly give up, to the breeze!

Where there is need of nothing, not a sneeze!

 