Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33077235-20180911001124/@comment-9041013-20180911145613

Well you have a wall of text, do google Paragraphs please.

Fix the grammar, spelling and punctuation errors too.

As for the story, ugh... it's heavily cliched and unscary; a bunch of kids living their lives, there's a weird person around them, turns out weird person is a satanist who has dark magic weilding abilities, pratagonist gets caught seeing something he shouldn't be seeing, supernatural stuff happens... death... or not...

How about making Sarah into a ghost, like a new kid in class who is a ghost but at first seems competely normal, until weird stuff starts happening around her to be topped with some horrible thing happening to her, which would kill her if she was human but doesn't... for the pratagonist to shit his pants as he realizes that his crush is actually an undead aparition.