Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27582895-20170201044223/@comment-26475800-20170201051414

I don't know the suicide rate for ten year-old's, but I can only imagine it's rather low. There is a reoccurring theme with all the stories I've seen you post, they are lacking much of a story. This could work, but we don't know anything, about any one. Everything I've told you in the past two posts you made hold true here. Of course, you can, and maybe should, take it all with a grain of salt.

So, what does this story need? A story would be nice. We are basically reading dialogue without knowing who's talking. I understand that's where the twist comes from, but it's annoying. We also don't know anything about the kid, his family life would be a good start. The only thing we do know, and this is basically only by osmosis, is that the kid has multi-personality disorder, or is a skitzo.

This dialogue could work, and could work really well, but there's no story to it. It would be like walking in on the middle of a conversation, or a movie that you really have to watch to understand. Do you understand what I'm trying to get at here?

Give us something more than just a few words. Do you read? I mean, do you read anything other than creepypasta? If not, you should. Go to the bookstore and pick up anything. I have no idea what your age is, I'm going to guess you're still is school, because all of your stories are based around younger children, and that's fine. Write as much as you can, but listen to what others tell you as well. Find things that work for you. And read every day.

If you want to write something that's good, even good enough to stay on this site, you're going to have to dig into reading. Get a few novels under your belt. I'm assuming you like horror, and also under the assumption you're in your early to mid teens, I would suggest Skullduggery Pleasant. It's a great group of books, about seven I believe, and they're a great read. If you don't want to get into something that long, or if you want to read something more disturbing, get a Koontz, Barker, or King book. Those are perhaps some of the best authors for horror in our time.

Reading makes good writers. Writing makes good writers. But not doing both, doesn't. You need to learn how to build a story, reading will give that to you. You need to learn how to get people interested in what you have to say, find what you're interested in, and read those kinds of books. It will give you an idea of what you have to do to write a story.

And most importantly, don't get upset when someone puts down one of your stories. Develop thick skin, you'll need it. There isn't a person alive who is know for writing that didn't get rejected before. Everyone's stories get rejected. If you can't take criticism, it's going to hurt, even if you can it hurts. But, learn from the rejections, and become a better writer because of it. Shoot for the stars, and work hard to get there. But if you get put down because your stories aren't up to par yet, you'll never make it.

Write something. Something long, with people interacting and show us what they do. Write something that is at least two-thousand words. Build a world and fill it with people, then torment those people. Show us their pain and pride. Build it up like they are about to achieve their life goal, then pull the rug out from them, and show us how hard their face hits the floor. Show us if they get back up, or if they wallow in their defeat. That's what we, as readers, want to see. Life is boring, we read to get away from the boring. Don't give us more of what we live every day. Don't give us bland stories.

Sorry, went off on a little bit of a tangent there, but try those things, and I'm sure your writing will improve tenfold.