Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20180921153801/@comment-36393004-20180924192245

DrBobSmith wrote: L0CKED334 wrote:

I wanted to stop with the tutorial, but the only way to make this whole story make sense is to have Jason complete it and actually explain what this place is really doing. I should have known better but I was wanting to leave it hanging a bit. I guess I missed my mark on this one but I am so glad everyone has given me good ways to improve. No, leaving him stuck there in the tutorial is fine. It does seem like the sort of stupid accident that a computer company would do with a Beta test. I completely rewrote the story to better suit the tone I was trying to create with my last draft. The basic idea is the same but everything else is different. I eliminated the hallway and completed the tutorial. I gave you a glimpse at the game to explain why all this is happening in the first place.