Talk:Penpal/@comment-24468828-20140211183037

Now THIS is how you write a story! Leave your lost Nick Jr. episodes and your hyper-realistic hedgehogs at the door!

This was well-written, original, detailed, and the arrangement was perfect. The way the author goes back and forth in the timeline (while it can be mildly confusing) allows him to give the reader something interesting to grab their attention from the start without giving away the whole punchline. He could tell the more mundane details of the story and still give you just enough to keep you hooked. It was detailed, without being overly-so. The reader got a feel for the surroundings, and got a clear image and feel for the place the narrator is, without being bogged down by a wall of text to describe a room.

Lastly, this is entirely plausible. There is nothing here that would require you to suspend your belief; no demons stalking him or stange monsters or haunted pokemon. Just a man. The kind we hear about on Investigation Discovery.

I'd say 10 out of 10, but I really don't think it does this one justice.