User blog comment:Raidra/Creepypasta Nightmares/@comment-4849011-20141111131739/@comment-24040907-20141112055309

Think nothing of it! I've already perused your page and the peculiar points of philosophical thought therein. They're intriguing, to say the least, and could perhaps be implemented into a story of yours.

So, I've read the story above, and I think it has good potential. It has a new setup, not the same old "dark and stormy night" introduction. Of course I haven't seen much of our protagonist yet, but I like him so far.

The idea of an extreme aversion therapy drug is scary on a realistic level (a quality you showed fondness for on your page, no doubt). It reminds me of someone I knew who was going through detox and had nightmares about snakes attacking him. I think that this will ring true to the tune of those who have been through the same situation.

Is Genie a scientist? Is she in your other stories? That's the only part that isn't clear to me.

I'm anticipating the completion of this story. I'd like to see what goes on in the mind of our hero Van.

I think that you should expand on the dreams, and the symptoms, to add to the atmosphere of the story. And then have it all climax at the Nightmare mentioned in the title : )

The only changes I would suggest would be changing DVD to Tapes, and in the first paragraph change Frame to Form, so that the whole thing reads smoother.

And for future reference, please post unfinished stories on my talk page. The admins hate it when we put stories in blog posts. Just lookin' out for ya : )