Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25226916-20141230202648

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Lovely. Doctor just came into my room and said my fever has spiked. I've had this shit disease for 3 fucking weeks now, why hasn't it gone away? I'm fucking sick of it. No pun intended.

I think- no, I know- I've got the flu. I can't drink much water without feeling nasious, my body aches like hell, and my nose is all stuffed up. Like an LA freeway during the holidays.

I checked into the hospital the moment I felt it coming on. Thought it was a cold at first till I puked my guts out. It sucks. And I ain't the only one with it. Attendance at the hospital has gone up faster than a turbo elevator. But- just my luck- I seem to have it the worst.

Wait. Time out. The doctors are saying they could inject me with a miracle cure. Whatever. Thank God. I don't even wanna guess how. I'm just glad it could all end.

They just injected me with this green shit that looks like the inside of a baby's diaper. Thry had this big ass needle that stung like a wasp the size of a tire. But whatever.

I'm kinda feeling foggy. I dunno, it's like everything is fading away all of a sudden. I'm feeling better, it's just kinda weird. I'm starting to wonder what they put into this, it isn

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The scientist was ecstatic. He had finally created a cure to the flu. He would be the envy of all American scientists! Soon after, one of his assistants came out, paler than a sheet.

Buzzkill.

"What happened?" asked the scientist.

"There were a few... complications. " The nurse shuddered violently.

"Impossible, the tests ran without a hitch. What's going on?"

"The patient repeatedly told us to run far, he was dangerous. We didn't leave him. Then, he leaped from his bed and went underneath. It's like he went insane. "

The scientist immediately ran past the nurse towards the room of the patient. He then heard screams from the area and bolted in.

The man was rail thin and pale, staring down at the vomitizing scene before him. The doctors were mangled and bloodied, with their organs strewn across the room. The scientist fought to keep down his vomit, and noticed a message on the wall, written in blood and bodily fluids.

"YOU CURED THE WRONG ONE" 