Talk:The Proprietor/@comment-5564808-20140413042543

Thank you for the feedback, everyone. This was one of my first forays into writing creepypasta, so it's helpful to see some comments. Now, MaruDashi, I understand exactly what you mean by the flaws of the second-person narrative; I had seen some stories here that executed the technique brilliantly, and apparently thought at the time of writing The Proprietor that it may be the most effective method of narration. However, I must agree with you that upon perusing the story again, I've become rather skeptical about how it works in the piece, and although it's too late to change the entire narrative now (plus, I believe I've edited the story substantially by this point), the constructive criticism is appreciated.