Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25389683-20140907073134/@comment-36627132-20181125021155

Spelling and Grammar Issues: Paragraphs should be broken down a bit more. "(Note:)I am" should just be "Note: I am". There are multiple times in the story when you don't capitalize "I" and also note that typos cannot be justified by saying that it is how the character wrote it.

Plot Issues: First off, my biggest gripe with this story is the name censorship. Every time I see a story that is trying to protect the identity of a (FICTIONAL) characer I assume the author is too lazy to think of a name. It doesn't add realism, and is very distracting. On top of that most of this story is just pointless filler. Why would Character #2 (people tend to use stock names when you're too lazy to give your characters names) e-mail him about a dream if they haven't spoken in a while?

Plot Issues Continued: What was the point of the break in the 2/5/1998_11:05PM and the 2/5/1998_11:42PM? What is the point of the gibberish message cliche? "I decided to contact him right away." "Mutilated body found, **** is shocked" why would they have his name and that he is shocked on its header? And finally the whole It-was-sent-after-he-died thing is kind of cliche.