Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20150126235031/@comment-25975226-20150127032338

I listened to this while playing the song and you are 100% right. It adds so much emotion to this story. I really loved this pasta, and I saw no errors reading over it the first time. This is really good, but I have to agree that some more clarity towards the end (regarding the specifics of how he is going to die) is needed. I wasn't sure what the leg struggling meant, but this was very beautiful.