Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20190122221206/@comment-9041013-20190124042305

I have to disagree with Bob here. Less is more. Lovecrafts whole craft was based around his fear of things he couldn't comprehend. Fear of the unknown is a very powerful thing, as a literary means and in real life.

Say this is in America, where people do believe in the superstitious and supernatural why would you risk losing potential buyers over telling people about the being? It seems tied to the family anyway.

I was most invested when the narrator had his "face to face" with the thing. Mostly because you have left a lot for the imagination. We call it a ghost, the story alludes to that too but what if a reader sees something other than your everyday ghost in this? That's the magic of a good story.

Keep it as it is. It's pretty good.

(Not to mention that to me a ghost that can almost control the forces of nature, as with the stray animals, should be very powerful and old, Millennia old. Not some Victorian spectre.)