Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26981710-20150926195105/@comment-27012445-20150928195651

The premise of the story really needs to be reconsidered. It unfortunately comes across as the opening of a comedy or parody. That is the only way I could account for the actions of the protagonist. Personally, If I saw some man standing in my backyard and then told me to “watch out for the man in the shadows”. My response would be, “No! You need to watch out for the man with the bat! If you don’t get your ass out of my yard by the time I get back, he’s going to haunt you up side you head with that bat!” Now that is some realistic story telling right there!