Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26867018-20151118144437/@comment-25170312-20151120014938

This isn't much of a story. It's more like the beginning of one. The disturbing subject matter requires more character development and introspection to be more than just shock value. I almost stopped reading at the part that described what is basically child porn. I'm not sure if this would be accepted based on that. Maybe if you just alluded to it instead of directly stating it. It definitely needs a lot of work.

Also, you should warn people when something is sexually explicit. When things like this are posted they are given an NSFW tag so that people can't view it unless they confirm that they want to view something explicit. Again, the description of a sex act with a minor might prevent this from being accepted altogether (it's also inappropriate, even for a creepypasta).