Talk:The Girl That Went Missing/@comment-24281984-20141117182230

I enjoyed this story up until the ending. While it felt rather rushed and somewhat unbelievable, the setup leading to it was well-executed and it's nothing a slight revision can't fix. I also removed the first sentence because "Hello, my name is..." openings are almost always unnecessary to the story. So aside from being a little too short, this was fairly well-written and managed to feel a bit more eeire than most stories I've read, again mostly due to the good setup.