Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-6822927-20190104215501/@comment-9041013-20190105203159

KingSparta300 wrote: Yeah, I agree. Some parts need to be reworked.

Out of curiosity, did you find any parts creepy? I did enjoy writing about the two presences, both of which are supposed to be the Fey Folk. I should make it more clear.

As for the parts where he plays pretend, the main character is remembering his childhood before it progresses to him having grown up, no longer playing pretend. This is one theme the story should explore more thoroughly, growing up and how things you enjoyed as a child change along with you. I didn't find anything creepy really, because again, I had to re-adjust myself every other sentence.