Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28088262-20140705153743/@comment-25122423-20140705170925

There's a tense change in the beginning ("Of course, it’s evident a pig like her doesn’t deserve him") and the entire pasta appears to be written in second-person (you as opposed I in first or he/she/they in third) but I'd say it's pretty good pasta regardless, with a nice plot twist and everything.