Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20181023000626/@comment-36393004-20181023171909

Just a Guy That Likes Creepypastas wrote: 1: Daniel killed a baby, not a groundhog. Hence the description: "big heads, no necks, small legs, large torsos". I wanted the horror of that moment of realisation to be from reading the story, not me explaining it. Daniel is so detached from reality he uses the "codeword" groundhog instead of baby. 2: There is a script used by Dr Fletcher on the clipboard that details every action Daniel makes when in the presence of a doctor. He has been in the mental hospital so long, his speeches and outbursts have become predictable enough to be predicted each day. Think of a script an actor uses. 3: The hospital gives medication to Daniel, making him think he has no eyes, as a way to monitor his reaction. 1. I got that he thinks it's a groundhog even though it was a baby, but you don't get put in a mental institution for killing a groundhog. 2. I get the script and I understand that, just seems the doctor gets pretty upset when being referred to by name. You do try to explain this with the other staff member commenting on his acting ability though. 3. I understand they give him medication to make him think he has no eyes and that they are monitoring his reaction but why? It has no medical benefit to Daniel and it seems they all enjoy torturing a mentally unstable person. Plus, you say it's scripted but your ended states that this is a newly attempted change in the daily routine. So, they are making minor changes to the routine (which again, don't seem to benefit the patient) and finding enjoyment out of it? That's the point I was trying to make.

Now, if there was some indication that Daniel did not fully understand why he was in the institution, that would explain the groundhog/baby business.

The doctor shouldn't be such a good actor, his "role" should faulter some. He's human.

The 'blindness" should be a side effect of a treatment that might actually be working toward Daniel's benefit and if they get a laugh out of his reaction because of it, so be it, but these doctor's just seem like assholes making fun of a person who has a serious problem, regardless of how long he's been there with no success. Now, if this were set back in the dark ages of mental instituations, where things like this were prevalent it would be a different story but because we have no background to tell a time...then I can't comment on that.

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