Talk:Teeth.jpg/@comment-26981815-20150913005249

English: 7/10? 8/10? There's sometime I haven't read this, and I'm not sure, but I've skimmed throught the story and there doesn't seem to be bad writing.

Story: 10/10. It's just incredible.

Creepyness: 13/10! it's simply was made to be creepy.

Scaryness: 9/10; I had a bit of trouble staying out of my covers next night.

Realism: 7/10. It was made out of no supernatural stuff, so it could've happened in real life. However, I took points for the following reasons:

- If the narrator died in the end, he couldn't have written this story.

- Lily couldn't be alive after 2 days in that state.

- The timing doesn't make sense, Lily sent the message at 1:30 to her girlfriend at her house, after all she left the phone at her house. Then, at 2:00 the narrator finds the picture of her in the PC. How could have Daniel have taken her out of the house, taken her to the secret room, dismembered her and all that, taken the picture, got home and uploaded it in the computer, and got out again all in less than hald an hour? Doesn't make sense.

Overall: I'd give a 9.5/10, the pasta is really good, but I take the 0.5 from the realism. Anyway, GREAT JOB with that story, it's so damn good.