Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-40058099-20190707181503

The structure falls apart in a few spots and some of the lines are definitely only there to make the rhyming scheme work, any advice or suggestions would be appreciated!

Everyone, everyone! Run! Run! Run! The Slaggerman descends! Patron of loneliness, founder of tears! Don’t look upon his melted face or you will meet your end!

His mouth is full of all the teeth you’ve lost in all your dreams! Lord of all sacrilege, knower of fears! Don’t gaze into what lies beneath his ragged trench coat’s seams!

Don’t know his touch, don’t hear his words, don’t let him know your name! Father of treachery, master of jeers! He’ll boil you down, he’ll eat you up! He’ll make you go insane!

He comes! He comes! He comes tonight! Just when the clock strikes twelve! Don’t look, don’t hear, don’t let him in! Or down to hell you’ll delve! 