Talk:Booty Call/@comment-25458443-20160519195252/@comment-25458443-20160520115915

idk I feel like the ending is creepy but sort of weird in a sense. I think I saw it coming but I'm not completely sure why the girl killed them in the first place...

I mean I understand why she went crazy but maybe some more context for why she would link those boys to those voices would make it feel more complete or scary or understandable or something.

Also the ending part where it's like "they think it's a small boy but a girl is not out of the question" is sort of silly to me. That's really nitpicking but idk

I think the "he likes dancing in the dark" line is probably the creepiest line in the entire thing to be honest. The whole story is written almost like a montage and I can't take it very seriously but for the first whisper scene you have all the context, scenery was already put into your head, and the situation already lends itself to something spooky to happen in a story, and the unknown-ness of "he likes dancing in the dark" is chilling, at least to me

It's so simple but it also doesn't mean anything without context, and the following lines seem to be directly refering to the boys she does the do with but "he likes dancing in the dark" doesn't really? I don't think..

(unless maybe it's because he's cheating on her? So he prefers dancing in the dark because they aren't seeing eachother anymore I geeeet it...)

But yeah solid story, it's creepy, it's original-ish. It disturbed me at some points and kind of bored me in others, but it's really short so I obviously don't regret reading it, keep it up!