Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26129984-20150221181242/@comment-25226524-20150221183523

I only read the first couple of paragraphs and noticed these issues:

"kisses from my puppy (that) forced me"

"(I) showered, dressed..."

Improper use of "it's" - it's=it is, its=possession. (its perfect windows--its flawed roof)

"seemed to bother really bother me" There's an extra "bother" in there or some missing punctuation (I would remove the first "bother").

You also need to repaste this in source mode to get rid of the font. Just hover your mouse over the bottom right corner of your post and click More, then click Edit. Click the little bracket symbol in the lower left corner ([ ]), then clear your story and paste it.

I haven't read the rest of the story to see about the overall quality, but you definitely need to proofread this a couple more times to get rid of the types of issues I mentioned. I would also recommend reading it out-loud to help you notice when things don't sound quite right. Good luck.