Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25890122-20150809183622/@comment-26860891-20150810023904

I find this to be an overused premise. It was nicely written, but it needs more details and written in a way that conveys information. I find it lacks impact because it keeps switching from talking about the reader, to talking about humanity is a whole. I think having a definite 2nd person, or definite 3rd person would help this story greatlt