Talk:Super Mario 64: Damned/@comment-9600371-20140401003404

Wow. I know I'm going to get a lot of hate for this, but that pasta was horrible. For one thing, way too much graphic imagery.You overused it to the point it was no surprise, and lost its scare factor. Another thing. The "LOL GUYZ I DIED" is a horribly cliche way to end a story. There was a lack of buildup in the midsection of the story, which reflected horribly on the ending. The black mass was a odd antagonist, and had no explanation whatsoever. You gave no reason for the events of the game to happen, it was more of an attempt to make people barf. I can continue, but I will give your score right now. Plot : 5/10. Characters: 7/10. Presentation: 6/10. Grammar: 9/10. Media: 5/10. Overall: 6.4/10