Talk:Pickens and Crest/@comment-29507836-20161027020815

I liked it! It was very good.

As shown by "Man's best friend", it shows just how much mothers love their children. It revolves around the love of Teddy's mother for her son and using that to your advantage in writing a story is quite nice indeed. For example, [... so I simply allowed him to stay home], or where she even ran into the road just to save her son. It really welcomed the essence of love and the relationship between a lone mother and son.

I like the wording, but I could see some errors here and there. It was enough to be noticed which dropped your grade from me quite a bit. Well put together, and the description was enough to not make it dull literature but not descriptive enough to make it a novel. It was just right.

However, I did not like the lack of original plot in this story. An evil friend of a child that turned out to be something worse? Seen it. Mental illness of a child? Seen it. You executed a cliche perfectly, though. I have to give you that at least.

I also think that the scare factor isn't quite that high, but it did get me on the edge in that part where, as said, time went slow. I think this appeals more to parents, I'm not quite sure, but for me it isn't that creepy nor scary. It's creepy enough to be a creepypasta, but not enough to be scary for most.

Overall, I rate this a good 8/10.