Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36300157-20190219121536/@comment-38701085-20190305021449

I think that the story is a little clinche. Here's what I think (don't take it too hard):

1) Mansions are already over used. Make it, perhaps, in places like inside the main character's house's walls and let Mary rip out thorough the wall in a terrifying burst of plaster and limbs.

2) The Character it Self. Have you ever played The Letter? Mary sounds an awful lot like the ghost.

3) The mansion's description sounds like the Slender Mansion.

Apart from that it's an okay read, but not very scary.

4 out of 10 ghosties.

P.S No @Slyster, your opinion is not worthless. You considered the story in your own way.