Talk:The Storyteller/@comment-24590886-20140227032947

This story is definitely going down as one of my favorite pastas. Your style of writing is firm amd unique, however this also takes away some of the charm. It felt a little rushed, but it blended in with the story. Your beginning and middle were charming, beautiful, and held the right pace. Torwards the end of the story is when it started to feel a bit rushed. If you are to remain the facade of a man telling a story, it would be best to start it as a narration, then gradualy began to degrade and "pick at" this narration and allow it to progress to a first person view. Also, it would be best to try to avoid many cliches. The twist-ending was definitely fitting for this pasta, however the dialogue between the two doctors and the behaviour of the man in the straight jacket was a bit flimsy. All-in-all, the ending could have been executed better, but for a first pasta, this is one of the execeptional pastas. 4.5/5