Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5946174-20140410062541/@comment-5946174-20140416030156

Crinal123: You're right in saying Synergy isn't creepy, and you aren't the first to point that out. It is, however, paranormal. I elected not to describe the episodes in great detail so as to retain the air of mystery while simultaneously making it as obvious as possible that when one hurts the other, he also harms himself. It's a balance, and one not easily kept. As for "shit" and oh yes, that's right" being out of place, it's worth noting that these are the words each man thought to himself. The confusion may have arisen from the fact that only spoken words need quotation marks, while thoughts do not.

Mistwalker09: I was visualizing the Battle of Stalingrad when I wrote it. The reason I chose this setting is because to feel pain, real or imagined, during the heat of battle is not unusual. However, a domestic setting like the ones you suggested would make them quickly realize that they're working towards their mutually assured destruction. In the chaos of battle, one does not have the time to think about such things.

I would like to thank you both for taking the time to read and review my pasta. I greatly appreciate it.