Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-30361889-20161030013349/@comment-30361889-20161031182220

Oh, holy hell, thank you so, so much! That was incredibly helpful!

I actually had a lot more lore lying around as I planned the story, seeing as the house is an actual existing one in Scotland. Aleister Crowley actually lived there as well and concerning him and his occult activities, there is so much more I wanted to put in but then it would have been way too long. So I'll try re-writing it using your advice and taking out the doctor.

As to the spelling errors; I am very sorry! Since I'm not a native speaker, I didn't catch all of them and writing it in Google Docs didn't help this at all. I should have proofread the text more often.

I have a strange love for pointless commas, I don't know where I got that from but I'll try to fix that, too.

Thank you again for taking the time to review, you pretty much showed me what I didn't like about my story. I'm almost angry at myself for not noticing the awful lack of world building earlier.