Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20160605205320/@comment-27008899-20160606125305

I feel this was very well written and unique. I really liked the description of afterlife part. It has some issues though. It's not really all that creepy to begin with. There is really no question of what is happening and no twist to provoke thought from the reader of what happened. While I feel it is beautifully written, it comes off a little preachy. I think it's good, but not appropriate for this wikia.