Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180401075507/@comment-9041013-20180401092527

Hilarious. I like it. You are kind of stuck on the dark comedic tone, but so far so good.

Dude, stop with the bloody brackets when you don't need them. Just throw in "which" and follow up with the sentence in brackets.

Also, I think if you kept refering the Greg as a "he" after he'd gone zombie it would've worked smoother. I mean I did see him turning into a zombie, but it's like the final nail in the coffin of this "surprise" when you start refering to him as a corpse rather than a corpse man.