Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-32391381-20170627025357/@comment-24101790-20170627030553

I'm sorry, but this is very rushed and has quite a lot of mechanical issues. Not to mention a lot of the lines feel like a botched attempt at comedy.

Capitalization: You forget to capitalize a lot of proper nouns. "We all know about Hitler and how he killed 6 million jews (Jews).", "We all know Hitler commited suicide on April 30th 1945 but there's more to this nazi's (Nazi's) grave than we think.", "Hitlers grave is haunted by his ghost saying things in german (German) that someone who only speaks a language that isn't german (German) won't understand as while someone who only speaks german could understand his last words.", etc.

Punctuation missing from possessive words. ""Hitlers grave is haunted by his ghost saying things in german (German) that someone who only speaks a language that isn't german (German) won't understand as while someone who only speaks german could understand his last words."" Apostrophes added to words that don't need them. "Many say they wake up with swastika's (swastikas) carved in their thigh and something that says hitler (Hitler) was here"

Awkward wording: ""Hitlers grave is haunted by his ghost saying things in german (German) that someone who only speaks a language that isn't german (German) won't understand as while someone who only speaks german could understand his last words."", " If anyone dares trespass Hitlers grave he brings you to your tourture (torture) and eventually your doom.", "You'll be lucky to make it out alive as many report ghost nazi's who have unfinished buisness.", etc.

Story issues: A lot of lines feel like a missed attempt at comedy. Lines like: "Adolf Hitler was born on april 20th 1889 and like the racist bitch he is, he grew up hating jews." and "While Hitler did a few good things like pass animal rights laws but he did kill millions of jews in a matter of years." really miss the mark.

Story issues cont.: The plot is rushed and really doesn't do a good job building up description. Lines like: "When he died his soul is rumored to stalk jews while they're sleeping then slit their throats in their sleep" need a lot more build-up. Other lines feel really obtuse. "Hitlers grave is haunted by his ghost saying things in german that someone who only speaks a language that isn't german won't understand as while someone who only speaks german could understand his last words."

I'm sorry, but I don't think this is going to pass the bare minimum quality standards we have on the site due to the widespread capitalization, wording, grammatical ("Now his grave is haunted by Adolf's soul it's self."), spelling ("You'll be lucky to make it out alive as many report ghost nazi's who have unfinished buisness."), and story issues. .