Talk:I Think My Phone Is Trying to Hurt Me/@comment-25170312-20150220025909

Pretty cool concept. Unfortunately, there's a bunch of cliches, some of which are repeated and none of which are given much of a personal touch (black eyes, gooey black substance, people speaking in weird voices / tongues, myserious person dressed in black with a hoodie). Then there's the grammar. Way too many sentences are broken up into a bunch of really short sentences, some that are just one word. There are times when it's acceptable, but here it was abused. Could have been way better.