Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25900635-20141221023136/@comment-25825682-20141221032918

I didn't have much time to read it, but did notice something:

"The stomach contains approximately 800 ml, without evidence of any pills o other non food stuff material. "

Was the o part of the dialect, if not it should read "or." in my opinion. I won't mention the spacing since you mentioned it, but you should space it. I'm not gonna say its hard to read, because that sounds dramatic, I mean if its hard to read you literally could't read it. It does visually look better to space it though.

Another thing I wondered, what time or era was the protagonist in. I couldn't fully connect to his plight without clarity of where he was at before entering the rift. Was it the time of the Black Death that swept over Europe for three years, from 1347 to 1350? There might be other errors with commas, I can't say since I had to speed read, but thats all I noticed so far.