Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25132251-20140801160050/@comment-24974354-20140806195237

i think the concept was good, but it does seem a little rushed and cliche. i think most of the terror that could come through this would be her own. it's scary realizing you're not quite right. thoughts like killing someone or something would probably be terrifying at first, sort of like a "what's happening to me, why do i feel this" kind of deal. honestly, i could see this being really good as less of a "serial killer" pasta and more of a "decent into madness" sort of thing.

mostly, i would say draw things out a bit more, tie things together ( like the shadows and the mysterious injury-not-injory ), and explain what's going on. give the girl some more characterization, make her interesting and someone the reader can connect with--that'll make it better when she finally does begin to spiral out of control.