Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25029554-20141127040402/@comment-25418458-20141129032552

Well, the pasta has nice plot build up and I see true potential in your work. The thing is it was possibly deleted for there being a "killer" aspect to it. since Jeff the killer style stories are prohibited. This story would truly be a gem if you hadn't taken the turn that it did. I like how you carried the characters creepiness, but you should add something unique to it so that you can feel they're genuinely scary. Next the friend being confused and up and killing the friend, could have been something much worse. Something worse than death. Nothing cliché or anything you would normally hear. Be original. The ending could be fixed because it was expected that that was the way it was going to end. Try another plot. Maybe the Best friend is just starting to make friend throughout the year and then meet the person they get attached to. Something like that though not exactly like that. what I'm really saying is spice it up and don't go for the killer formula. Be creative.