Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26573352-20150704193257/@comment-26572345-20150704195454

It has a pretty strong opening and the story held my interest rather well. The added tension of a missing animal is also a nice touch.

There are a couple of grammatical errors that need ironing out ("months went bye" should read 'months went by') and a lot of the paragraphs are too large, most of them need to be separated in the middle.

With that said, if you can get on with focusing on editing it so it can be better presented, I think a lot of people would be interested in seeing this story be continued, myself included.

Best of luck and I await any further work from you.