Talk:Oldman Edward/@comment-5733573-20181021143619

This feels rushed, incomplete, and honestly, quite silly. It's all build-up and no pay-off. The father's story is laughably unrealistic, and then the urbex conclusion just goes nowhere. There's also no way police would drag a murderer out of his home and then not search the place thoroughly enough to leave a pile of human bones just chilling in one of the rooms.

Horror's impact comes from how believable it is. If a story is completely unrealistic, it loses its reader. Next time you write a story, ask yourself, "How would this play out in real life?" Then, don't force reality to bend to your story, but instead amend your idea to fit in the real world. This will make your stories much stronger.