Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20150309053023

I go to tried on the story about a game GTA haunted by the ghost of a African American Teen i go the first half here and post the other after so tell me what do you think if i make error tell me i will corrected them, The protagonist is a African American boy named Marc i tried story with Caucasians but its not accepted. So this is the first half.

Marc had left to the market with his parents, he was not used to going out in family, a day during the market Marc had heard about the Grand theft auto V. He wished to have this game for his birthday, but his parents did not want to buy the video game saying that it was too violent, they liked hardly this gangster's game, because this game could turn  young people violent, while Marc walked he sees a stand of video game, he approached it and sees exactly a disk of game writes in the marking ink grand theft auto V. 