Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190515084101/@comment-35911608-20190528114951

Yup, this looks good to go to me.

I'm glad you toned down the direct references to 1984, but also added some more interesting concepts of your own. The book turn-in really caught my attention; I can completely see that being something that would happen.

The ending also finally got my fears of atomic apocalypse going. The description of what happened to Mateo's former home was really good, and I could feel the worry that plagued his mind in those last few lines.

With that, I wish you best of luck in the contest :)