Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-34823985-20180418033207/@comment-9041013-20180418150340

Kolpik wrote: Even half asleep, seems like typical Bloody to me. :) You don't have to make excuses for your opinions or whatnot with me. I just appreciate that you keep showing up. Although, insinuating a while back that my writing style is a bit boring and odd did sting a little. I'm a grown man, and I can take a few slings and arrows as long as it's in the arena of the writer's workshop.

You've given me something to work with here. I was doing research for a story, and this just came to me. I wasn't trying to cover every defense the human race can utilize. Trying to be a little more serious for some of my projects, so I'm going to stay away from mentioning sperm banks, lol.

I haven't flirted with 'human race track' puns and themes since I was a teenager. It's something I was energetic about messing with again. As for the nature issue; I was thinking more along the lines of nature just redirecting issues we created ourselves back at us, and I'm glad you mentioned hubris. I wanted it to seethe with it. I hope the three little pigs reference wasn't too much. I intended it as a kind of awkward 'Animal Farm' homage.

As far as the ichorous rain goes, I was vague on just how long it had been going on for. I honestly hadn't thought about it much. I just wanted some feedback, so thanks, Bloody. I'll work on the rhythm. I was trying to end every third and forth line with words that didn't necessarily rhyme but worked well together in context (again - condemned). I'll keep at it. Let me know if anything else pops in your head once you've rested. :) I was just nitpicking. Also, I did not notice the reference until you've mentioned it... I just thought "ohh houses of poor people" and stuff of that sort. The reference though, I think it's good.