Talk:Mr. White

Very cool paranoia story. There are some issues of abrupt tense changes, and you use "fuck" and "shit" way too much in the second half. Even though he's panicking, that's sort of a cop-out. :P Points for Mr. White's awesome dialogue, though, and for the expression "bulby death". Javer80 03:05, September 18, 2011 (UTC)