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Chapter 5

I apologize for my absence as I had a paper due. I have another due this week, but I will try to read as much as I can. I am not going to remark on the exact grammer issues in this chapter. There are some tense issues and minor rule issues. It is to be expected a story this size will need a lot of editing and proof reading before it is ready for submission.

Chapter 5 overall - description has been a lot better since chapter 1. I liked this chapter, but I would think Aloe would be more concerned and likely would ask some of the crew to help her find Faa. Aloe seemed to have Faa as a second thought to business, which is fine if that is the characters persinality, but I did not get that from them in previous chapters. Other than that, I would say I am excited to see where it goes.