Talk:Poor Despair/@comment-24040907-20150206214601/@comment-24040907-20150207210738

Well, I'll tell you what. It's very difficult for me to judge you as a writer based on this one story since it has so many restrictions (time limit, word limit, pre-assigned topic, etc.) Perhaps if you've written another story on this Wiki, and I could read it, I could better assist you.

For now, I do have some suggestions:


 * Keep up with those awesome analogies/metaphors.


 * Make the stories a bit longer (obviously)


 * Maybe go into more detail with character description and character emotion.

That's about all I have for now. I'd like to read more from you, and I wish you good luck!