Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20161008211233/@comment-24101790-20161012155708

ChristianWallis wrote: ~snip~

Thanks for going in-depth with this, I'll try and sit-down later today after I take care of some RL stuff and fix up some of the clunky wording and think of a way to portray the man's deteriorating relationship with his family in a better light without it becoming too much like exposition/info. dumping. Thanks for the time it took to read and review this.