Talk:Please, Don't Look Away/@comment-25477067-20150415234809

Wow. Am I the only one here calling BS on how great this story is? I mean, it isn't the WORST PASTA EVURRRRRRRRRRRRRR but I fail to see any sort of originality in this pasta. the ending is expected from the title, the plot is contrived, and the only good thing I have to say is that the grammar is not messed up. What is scary about this? This is just a standard issue "YOU'RE NEXT" pasta with little-to-no originality.

One thing that ticked me off that might not annoy others is the mention of creepypasta in a creepypasta. Most people, however, agree that this lowers the quality of the story overall. This is more personal preference than an actual error, but I should point it out. This sentence made me laugh. "I listened, waiting for a demonic voice or a blood curling scream like most of the wikis on here describe..." Firstly, why on earth would you expect a phone call to be a demonic voice, secondly, (being nitpicky here)  wikis? As in more than one? How many wikis are we talking about here? I assume you meant stories. This seems like a boring series of events that eventually lead up to him staring at a page because he....< insert danger here because I can't find it>  Also, just to be nitpicky, how did you write this story, then? I mean, if you cannot look away from the page, I mean?