Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150421064845/@comment-26007602-20150422201157

You only need one space in between each paragraph. The extra spaces kind of look like simple padding to stretch out the short length of the story.

Other than that, I'd have to say that it seems fine enough. I don't know much about micropastas, but this seems fairly vague enough to be creepy to some. I worry about the originality of the piece however; I'm absolutely certain this has been done before. I myself haven't read anything from the "Dreams and Sleep" category, but I'd guess that this is a very common theme there. You're going to need to find a way to differentiate this from the other "Dream's are real" stuff. You've got a good concept, maybe elaborate on where/why/what experiments happen when you're asleep? Just a little?

I think the concept's solid, but worry it'll get deleted for lack of anything new to the genre.