Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26705150-20150824213148/@comment-26572345-20150824215001

I reckon this could earn a page on the Wiki, but there are a couple of things that need sorting out. Firstly, it's difficult to tell when the narrative switches from the main character to the Grandfather, as there are no speech-marks or apostrophes. Another small thing is that in the first paragraph, 'Horror' shoudn't have a capital 'H' in that context; an uncapped 'horror' would work fine.

Personally, I'd say look over this again and make sure the punctuation is acceptable, as it has the workings of a pretty good pasta.