Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-7064562-20170706155016/@comment-7064562-20170708065845

Hey, thanks for the feedback.

A few things to note. I'm not trying to argue your points or say there wrong but just general notes:

- It's not a creepypasta. Simply a story I wanted to get out of my mind and done with. However, many creepypastas such as borrasca(Amazing Story) and I dared my best friend to ruin my life(Horrible story) Didn't really rev up the creepy factor till later on. I find that this is one of the best sites for feedback for stories so I just really wanted to see some common errors I tend to make.

-  It's 8 chapters that are already done, so the start and the abrupt ending are all foreshadowing and dramatic effect that comes into play in the later chapters. The start helps you get into the character's mind outside of him just being a sarcastic asshole that comes into play later as the story goes on, as teenagers are an angsty mess. Something I like to do in my writing, as most books, novels, etc always have characters that are really unreal and only seem to have one personality, while irl people are rather hypocritical and spontaneous. *Cough Katniss the slut*

I posted all 8 chapters at once, but as it wasn't getting reviewed, I figured one at a time would be best.

- Ya the comma thing was an issue so I'm glad you pointed it out. You see, I was using a grammar program and it likes to add in more commas than needed. It's actually why I posted it on here! I felt it had too much, but I wanted to see if it was an actual issue or if the grammar corrector was wrong. The grammar checker itself is kind of a double edge sword when it comes to punctuation and what not.

There are some other things, but not very important as of now, thank you for your feedback.