Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32289854-20180308011647/@comment-34823985-20180308184647

Well, that was a fun read. It had a good pace up until Kelly left the cave. It feels a bit rushed after that. I think you could also work on bringing out your character's emotional reactions a bit more as well. A couple spots I feel need work are: 1-Put on this hazmat suit. Oh, you were exposed to the mysterious black ooze yesterday? Aren't antibiotics great? 2-I've got a lump on my head. No big deal.--- All in all this is a good story. I enjoyed it. I might wince a bit when I see moss from now on so... thanks for that. I thought it was just a slipping hazard.