Talk:Not of This World/@comment-26148592-20150306164618

Very interesting. I loved how you put the twist at the end " I'll even make us some sandwiches while we talk". That made this pasta so much better lol. Great concept fantastic details. Maybe you could say that the weird sounds you had were translated into something creepy and elborate a bit more. All in all great pasta. I look forward to reading more of your stories and I rate this 7.5/10