Talk:The Flash Drive/@comment-3524611-20160316195540

Well, the ending of this turned out to be predictable and rather bland. However, you could've made it longer and build up the suspense. Consider this, why not consider writing from the POV of the girl? That way, you'll be able to encapsulate her emotions, her feelings, and her overall sorrow. Then, you could proceed to the narrator's point of view. So far, that's all I can think of.