Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26981815-20160116111256/@comment-26835140-20160116170049

Dude sweet! the fathers commentary in between tapes was a very nice touch. there are some minor errors like "im WRITING this under the sheet", "I woke just up", and "Jessica was crying IN my shoulder" there is another one but i cant find it again. otherwise it was pretty awesome and it was a much better improvement and you should defenitely publish it! im super glad i could help you with it, and if you ever want some more info or help or anything like that, shoot me a message.