Talk:Hyperesthesia/@comment-24040907-20150224001315

This one was awesome. When I first noticed Tullugaq in the story, I wondered if this was a possible sequel to Train Stops in the Middle of Nowhere, and then when you mentioned Henderson I leaned back and thought “I knew it!”



Concerning this story, however, I think it was very well done. I kid you not, I was actually biting my fingernails during your description of Tullugaq’s transformation into a raven. Things involving tendons usually don’t freak me out, but anything concerning double-jointed-ness (what would likely happen when becoming a bird) hits me very hard. Nice work!



I’ve got to say, the entire story is so indescribably fluid. Maybe it’s the smoothness of the way you listed features of the environment (as Raidra pointed out, when you describe the cats), or perhaps it’s the spatial organization of the story (first we’re outside the store, then we’re on the sidewalk, now we’re in the air) that compliments it so.



But what’s going to happen to Tullugaq? How is she going to catch that train as a bird? Will she ever be restored to her original state? Now that the cats are gone, will people still turn into animals when they try to get into Dirk and Gantry’s? Just a few questions I had.



Nice work on the pictures, by the way. Did you compose those specifically for this story, or had you already created them prior to this?