User blog:Mukurone/Demo Pasta

As I've stated before, I'm a beginner writer. The following is a brief pasta that I jotted down yesterday. I'd like honest opinions to see if I'm heading in the right direction before attempting something more serious.

I don't know how I managed to crane my neck far enough to see. Apparently some guy went and passed out further down on the bleachers. Have you ever heard of a worse way to ruin a football game? After a fair amount of pushing and shoving, I managed to make my way down there just in time to see my sobbing wife talking to a medic.

"I'm sorry miss, there was nothing we could do. It was a brain aneurysm."

It was then I finally realized a slow trickle of fluid was leaking out of my ears. I didn't have to look to know it was blood.

I'm fairly proud of how this turned out, so I'm hoping that I get little inspirations like I did for this one to write, and hopefully submit!, pasta of my own.