Talk:Off the Highway/@comment-25146459-20170309050027

So, my main criticism was going to be about punctuation, dialogue structure, and paragraph structure. I don't know if that happens a lot around here, so I didn't want to go too "Grammar-Nazi" about it as the story was very captivating and interesting.

And then you hit us with the ending. So, no complaints about how this was written. I would say, despite the fact this is coming from an amateur writer typing on his phone, that some of the stuff seemed kind of jumbled and hard for me to follow along with. I'll read some more of your stories to see if this was intentional, or if it was more getting into the mindset of the narrator. Either way, nice story, brotha!