Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140811072625/@comment-24996913-20140813021108

Thank you. I was thinking about making it a bit more subtle but I felt how I wrote it would sort of confuse the reader so I opted out. I do think I should expand it a bit more and go into detail with a few things which will make my story flow smoothly. Then, I could make the wife and children scenes more subtle.