Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26976322-20150910232604/@comment-26849473-20150911003400

This needs to be scrapped. I'm sorry, but it just isn't good. Characters are cardboard and the atomsphere is less scarier than the bathroom at Taco Bell.

But there is potential, I can give you that. Rewrite it, more detail on characters and atmosphere, make it longer, then repost it.