Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20191109053116/@comment-9041013-20191111011224

Owl. I can't critique this. I am enjoying this too much, to be honest. You somehow manage to make me enjoy essentially what can be summed up as a "Lost Episode Pasta". Never thought the day I'd admit such a thing would come, and yet here we are.

The whole thing feels just eerie enough; not too little, but not too much. Just the right amount of eeriness. You somehow manage to make the cartoonish concepts just grounded enough so they don't become silly. The whole thing gets cranked up to ten at right moment at the end of the piece and then goes and tugs at the audience's heart strings by revealing that the narrator is a really sensibly and decent human being who is trying to fix his terrible mistake from years ago. Sure most people wouldn't. They'd freak out and try to forget the whole ordeal but some would take action. These sort of characters don't get enough decent representation.

Overall, good job.