Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-1186783-20141229015738/@comment-25170312-20141230211742

It definitely works better now, but I just noticed the shifting between simple past tense, and past progressive. Simple = "He wanted a stage for his little show". Progressive = "He only gets one punch in before Donny Cass pulls him away." The new parts seem to be in progressive whereas everything you had before is in simple. Everything should be the same. I kind of like the progressive because it gives the narrator the type of personality you might expect from someone telling this kind of story. Either way is fine, your choice of course.