Talk:Nightshift/@comment-15777822-20131027211347

It seems to be a well-written story, with few grammatical or spelling errors (though a few minor edits wouldn't hurt) and you build the tension nicely.

There are a few things I was wondering about, concerning the urban legend of Judd Mertion. First of all, a character in an urban legend with a clear given name and a career as a surgeon would be very easy to your protagonist to look up if she wanted to.

Secondly, I'm sure his shenanigans in the morgue would have been noticed sooner, even if security was more lax in the 60s. I'm not totally sure how morgues are run but I'm fairly sure that a hospital with a decent intake would have staff working in the morgue area most of the time. Maybe something to consider.

Finally, dead bodies behave very different to ours. Shortly after death, rigor mortis sets in, which makes the muscles much more difficult to cut into. Skin becomes almost impossible to stitch. Blood stops pumping round the body and settles in areas that are close to the ground, which affects how it leaves the body when it is shot point blank in the head. Just little things like that. I hope this is helpful to you x