Talk:Jailbreak/@comment-25926760-20150129202932

An interesting, but rather cliche concept. Decently written, but lacking in substance. The anonymity is acceptable in this short of a pasta, but if you ever intend to write another, longer one, flesh out the characters. Give them names, personalities, background, etc. That "flesh" is what binds a reader to a particular character. The more immersive a story/book/pasta is, the better the read. The better the read, the more satisfaction. 6.5 / 10