Talk:The Seven Artifacts/@comment-1455763-20150915081453

Needs improvment. The twist at the end is a tad cliche and a bit too cryptic. I like the items they are cool creepy and interesting. But they need an explanation for each of them on how they can be obtained. That would make the story more believeable and feel more realistic. I personally don't think the twist ending about family trees and getting passed down and genomes really works well. But definatly work on it! I see great potential in this story :)