Talk:Coldharbour/@comment-37138398-20181011163922

Story: Awesome! The detail is amazing! Loved the emotion that was conveyed through the first person narrative.

Lore: Not so great. First, Bal turns living creatures into vampires. Technically, Jeriah would have to be alive in order to become even a standard vampire. The Argonian slave was most likely dead in ColdHarbour before she came along. Second, it is rare for vampires to answer Bal directly. In Dawnguard, while Harkon did worship Bal, he didn't answer to him. It takes a lot of power for a Daedra to project himself into Mundus. Thirdly, I would imagine Boethiah would fight this fight, too. While Bal's response is appropriate (He doesn't like Boethiah, and would not doubt be made if a worshiper of himself would go to Boethiah), Boethiah seems to have not reaction at all. Yes, she is the Deadric Prince of Treachery, yes, she values self-sufficiency above all other traits, but the fact that the father was a Boethiah preist turned Bal turned Boethiah preist makes that man invaluable, and naturally, Boethiah would want a piece of that action. Finally, Serana in Dawnguard gives you very good insight into how to become a Daughter of ColdHarbour. Yes, Bal does "defile" you, and yes it hurts, but judging from the story on how Bal created the first Vampire, it should take him about five minutes for him to have his way with you, not three freaking months. I'll include a picture of the Elder Scrolls Calendar, but, overall, lore-wise this story has some holes.

Storytelling: 10/10 (Loved how detailed the writing was)

Lore: 2/10 (Take a trip the the Elder Scrolls Wiki when you have the time)

Overall: 6/10