Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26448563-20150920094714/@comment-25037895-20150920125621

While the story did invoke some interest for me, I think it's rushed and somewhat generic. Reflections coming to life, and/or bleeding, is a bit worn-out at this point. Brent not having a reflection earlier in the story as he was driving away is not drawing interest because there's this line: "I thought it might have been the funny angle we were standing at". Not being sure whether the angles were just right or not, that kills the suspense.

This line: "but now I know what it really was. What it must have been." comes off melodramatic. It seems to be cheap foreshadowing, and it seemed really awkward reading it.

The paragraph with this line at the end: "I thought that he would do fine too, and he appreciated the support." seems to be rushed character development. It would be more effective if it was drawn-out more or included a more defining moment that brings the characters together.

This is a bit of a cliche: "If you ever look into the mirror, and don't see your reflection, the only thing you can do is pray. The Mirror Man will be coming for you."

And when the two friends show up at the party, it's a bit cliche. Not sure if you were trying to make it seem as though the intensity was dropping in that moment, but as I was reading, that's exactly what happened. And then the creepy shit starts back up again (Creepypasta Wiki:Creepy Clichés: read #5 under "general cliches"). It's not really glaring or anything, but that segment could use some fleshing out, or just take it out. The whole idea of them preparing for a party didn't really seem to play out at all, as earlier it was told that everyone would be pouring out in a tidal wave of flesh, yet only three people were mentioned. That makes the story seem rushed.