Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9584883-20150217160417/@comment-9584883-20150218133116

Shadowswimmer77,

Thanks so much for the long critique and observations. My turn...LOL. Yeah, the beginning I may alter a bit. Still up in the air. This was meant to have sort of that B-Movie feel to it. The protagonist is a mean-girl stuck-up-bitch. We all knew them in high school. Thats the beauty of it. Everything in it is intentional. If you are familiar with my work, you know I love the anti-hero (See Pasta Noir: Dames, Slugs and the Hatchetman).

As far as the level of violence not being realiistic, this pasta idea is a take on an actual case which really happened. The case was told to me by a detective friend. I was given permission to write about it in a pasta I wrote a week or so ago. I didn't promote it as I wasn't trying to write the next great pasta with it but wanted to tell the story. It isn't great by any means, actually I would count it as one of my lesser works. It was written for a blog by the artist formerly known as -theRuckus-. It happened the way I wrote it, only names and locations were changed... Tiny Dancer. So, I know it does happen. Albeit maybe not so much in high school but this sort of thing happens everyday. Now, thats not to say that it has never happened ever in high school... every situation we can imagine has probably happened in real life at some point.

As far as the common-Joe names, hey... the names of the fuckers that did this is unimportant... they're dead anyway. They could be named Billy Joe Jim Bob (yes all one person) or Sally... they are going to meet a nasty demise.

With most of my work, your'e going to get a ride. I want to write something a little different. Something that felt like you are watching a B-movie. You don't like the protagonist at first but you slowly begin to sympathize with her plight and will enjoy seeing her dispatch her killers. If I continue, it will get nasty. BTW... I really love the image of your statement "With luck, she'll be doing cheers while dual-weilding chainsaws". Friggin awesome! Thanks, that gives me some ideas... hehe.