Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24982950-20140928111256/@comment-24821182-20140928161330

I have to wait until you post more to judge the story's overall quality, but what's written so far is decent. I think you go a little overboard with italics; if you want to use them to mark dialogue, that's fine, but when the regular text immediately after is also in italics, it looks odd when compared with the rest of the story.