Talk:The Abalone Thief/@comment-25052433-20150201013710

This was a very ambirtious story and has potential to go in many directions. Sequels or prequels are well likely here, as this particular telling leaves a lot to the reader's imagination.

This story contained two of my favorite elements for horror stories:

1. Shady small towns with secrets.

2. Strange archaic cults.

I include cults and rituals in many of my stories, so I certainly enjoyed and appreciated your writing here.

The buildup was executed very well in this pasta. The cult was by far the selling point of this story for me, and learning more of its intentions kept me scrolling down.

I could have done with less of the marine biology lesson though. I feel like you spent a lot of time going into detail of abalone, and some of it began to feel a lot like a text book instead of a horror story. I would suggest condensing that portion of the story, and introduce more suspense to really rope the reader in.

Everything else was done really well, and this was a very enjoyable read. You have great potential with this style of writing, and I am looking forward to seeing more from you in the future.

Great job!