Talk:Under the Weather/@comment-5733573-20180516032157

This was great! I really want this to be part of a larger series where we eventually see who was dropping pills into the drinks and what the freakin' hell is actually going on. The mystery and gross-out aspects were just right.

If there's one bit of criticism I would give, it would be to lay off the semicolons. Seriously. There is no need for that many. One or two is fine, but in this quantity, they're distracting and disorienting. Some things should really just be two sentences.