Talk:He Was a New Man/@comment-5000412-20150221023848

Another very different and original pasta. It managed to be quite disturbing, especially near the end with the soup feeding and the revealed pregnancy. What I enjoy is that it manages to unnerve through the eeriness of the situation (rather than shallow, cliched techniques), despite being a paradise through the eyes of Davis. Safe to say, I felt quite uncomfortable in the final few sentences.

I lost interest in some of the more technical medical descriptions, but they didn't last long. To be honest, I didn't feel like Steven's past needed a reflection. It's easily found out that he's insane, and it can also be found that he's been messing with people for a long time. Maybe it's just me, but a few images and descriptions displaying those would be more interesting than briefly outlining his past.

It was a very enjoyable story. It concludes with a hopeless and haunting image, one that captures a doomed character in one of the most vivid ways.

Keep on writing.

-E