Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20161129220751/@comment-25226524-20161202181949

Quite nasty and intense. The ending feels a tad bit abrupt/underdeveloped, but it's not terrible. Like the other, I feel like it deserves just a bit more following such a vivid and exciting scene. I found almost no issues that weren't minor things that will be caught with basic editing.

This was an enjoyable read, and it now appears you may have quite a knack for writing in this style.