Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26581361-20150707024159/@comment-26715482-20150718033221

I guess i'm tardy to the part but I will throw my two cents in here. Firstly is you don't explain what this "Yuntah" looks like all we know is that it's a being that can tell when your death is. Also why does this "Yuntah" tell people when their deaths occur?, does it take joy in watching people watch their days count down?, does it appear to only certain people?. The story needs to be longer and the "Yuntah" needs to be flushed out more before this can be a story worth while.