Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3563804-20150509192535/@comment-26027963-20150509193200

Um... I think you need to slow down. This seems pretty rushed, and the apparent "plot" isn't really a plot at all. It just describes a prank call to some guys neighbor. You need to correct your formatting, also. Every new speaker has to have a new paragraph.

It also has a lot of typos and random words, like in "what lord of this April Fools day." Why is the word lord I there?

All in all, you need to proof-read and slow down.