Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27159479-20151104133655/@comment-26425680-20151105021013

This story is all set-up and no follow through. You take time to describe the house and to give us a backstory, and then... it's all a big joke. The end. I'm sure you can understand why this type formula is a recipe for disappointment, and from your comment above, it seems like you've already come to this conclusion. Your solution, to have the stories be true and have the family get murdered, would be an improvement, but not too surprising or original. Overall, it just leaves me with a "meh" feeling. You have some clunky sentences as well. Here's a prime example:

"I moved closer to the window to see if I could see what was out there, but I couldn’t see anything."

You use "see" three times in rapid order, and it just comes off as awkward.

Also, you used "came through" instead of "came to," as in came to consciousness.