Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20160413174929/@comment-25471109-20160417045747

Hey Mmpratt99, finally got around to reading your story.

You're a descent writer, and you have talent! While your grammer is sometimes a bit off, you can easily solve that by making sure your work is reviewed by an editor (something I do for everything I write).

As for the story, it was a fairly descent concept. I sensed a bit of Guillermo Del Toro here. I don't know if you're familiar with his movies or not, but this story reminded me a lot of them. However, I feel as though there was not enough buildup to where the creature leaves the house. There needs to be more buildup and suspense here. Then, you'll have yourself a good-old-fashioned Guillermo Del Toro monster story on your hands. Overall, good work. Keep writing and keep practicing!