Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29076144-20160715191116/@comment-27008899-20160716174027

I did not get completely through yet but here are some of the issues I see from the first part.

Spelling: "I loved hunting thought" should be "though"

Grammer: "probably use traps. Will said - open parenthesis "Slow down...Where is the car?" He - you have to be careful with this in writing. If you use a non proper noun like "they, he,she" after dialogue it needs to be lowercase.

Wording: there is a lot of awkward wording through out the story. Try to think of how you could make a line sound better before writting it. Never begin a sentence with "And".