Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44145425-20191021183216/@comment-36627132-20191021212455

First of all, there are too many spaces between paragraphs which gives the story a sloppy look.

The first entry has a few problems. The (clearly intentional) spelling issues make this story look like it is either a trollpasta, or written by someone who didn't use a spellchecker. On top of that it is kind of questionable as to why having a diary would interest a six year in the first place.

The overall story is repetitive. All of the entries are about the author complaining that he had a bad day and describing his own bad behavior.

Nothing actually creepy happens, the entire story is just a string of bad behavior which ends with the main character talking about committing murder

"I do this on behalf of God, for I am the messiah." I advise against going with this line because Sonic.exe made the already-laughable line "I AM GOD", and lines similar to it, look like a joke.