Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25659560-20141118033240/@comment-24784485-20141125014330

The run on sentences are a problem. However, unlike umbrello I got the just of the story. The plot is nonexistent; you're basically just describing "Death walkers". What exactly is supposed to scare us? The audacity of your punctuation errors? This isn't a story. This certainly isn't a creepypasta. I suggest reading the "writers guidelines" and then trying again.