Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190207081051/@comment-9041013-20190210165606

That sentence about the boring priest is still not good. Still reads weird.

"A sick bat", avoid "sick", just mention the Bat.

"Third world disease" ehhh nah, it's a global thing, I think, vaccines are a thing for humans and animals in the western world (my dog has to get a shot once a year against rabies for example).