Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25763427-20150805015126/@comment-26475800-20150805020121

This seems to be up to QS. The story is good and rather well written. The only real thing that seemed off was: "whether by they get shot up by war, filled up by drug overdoses, burnt to a crisp in a car accident, or their body will inhale their organs in an attempt to stave off hunger…”

The wording was a little awkward, and the ellipse isn't needed. His sentence was finished and he wasn't cut off you can just end it with a period.