Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27086420-20151018050712/@comment-27086420-20151022181923

KillaHawke1 wrote: The writing skills are very good with only some minor punctuation errors. The story itself was a bit hard to follow. I wasn't quite sure what message you were trying to get across. The big question asked, the big reveal "what did I do that I wanted fixed or removed" with the intro about completely messing something up was disjointed. I really was unable to get a clear understanding of what the story was trying to say Now that I look closely, yeah. When I write, connection and cohesion are what I have the most trouble with. Not to mention this is my first true effort at CP writing so... May I ask, what would your thoughts be on making the story clearer? Should I edit the question or... I know this is my story and is my choosing to do with, but I would just like some direction from the experienced.