Talk:The Expressionless/@comment-27267990-20151122195807

All I have to say is that you don't start out with a terrifying monster. In order to keep people up at night you start with a normal situation and hint at something off. YOU DON'T START OUT WITH A CRAZY MONSTER MANNAQUIN HAVING A LIGHT SNACK ON A KITTEN WITH PEOPLE PUKING AND RUNNING TERROR THAT'S PUTTING THE CLIMAX FIRST. I would lke to reference the scariest creepypasta I know 1999. The normal situation: kid watching TV, Strange hint at creepyness: only has 3 shows all of which seem murdery. This story goes past the suspension of disbelief and uses the most overused line ever: "I... am... God...". They need to use less detail and let the human imagination to do more work.