Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-16271336-20140821212649/@comment-16271336-20140821220059

EmpyrealInvective wrote: Looking over your story, I notice a number of capitalization errors with objects, ("Orange juice", "Cheeseburger", etc.) grammatical (It's=it is, its=possession), punctuation (commas being misused/missing from sentences where they are needed).

Writing a story in 2nd person perspective is also hard to do and typically detracts from the overall quality of a story due to issues with characterization. (Or lack thereof) There are also some plot issues concerning the ending "The other person that died was the one with the knife. You." Revealing that the protagonist has died at the end of a story is an over-used trope and seems out of place in a second person perspective story.

I would say that the story was probably deleted for quality issues. (A recommendation: I would use the writer's workshop as a means for getting feedback/review as your friends' opinion of your story may be skewed by their relationship with you.) Thanks, the only thing that REALLY sucks is that I hardly remember it and I at least want it to make some edits, I didn't save it into a text document(which I should really start doing).