Talk:Wozzles/@comment-5733573-20180902175659

It's an okay story, if a little bit predictable. The internal organs reveal would be stronger if it were more integrated into the climax of the story and not tacked on as an afterthought.

The execution is really awkward in places as well. You seem to repeat things and jump from one topic to another and back. For example, it would make sense to describe Wozzles as soon as the present is opened and we know that's what the narrator is seeing. Instead, the description comes a lot later and at a weird time. Look for other places where you can clean things up. Try reading it out loud to yourself.

Overall, it's not the worst I've seen. It's just underwhelming and really nothing new or exciting.