Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25199611-20150709211018/@comment-26715482-20150719154817

The story had little to no pacing it seems it was just rushing us towards the ending. There are many left unanswered like;

How where they forced out of their homes? Was it at gun point where they taken while they slept, you need to explain that because that is a big detail.

Why is there a conveniently placed gun? It's a well reasonable question that there just so happens to be a gun under a floor panel.

Why did the writer take the pills afterwards? I mean it was from the same people who I could assume abducted them, it just made me question what they where thinking taking the pills.

In short this could become a decent story if it had more details and some points of the story being changed. I hope you continue making edits and take in feedback so your story can become one acceptable by the QS.