Board Thread:Writer's Showcase/@comment-26373030-20150621123122/@comment-25037895-20150621234418

Whitix was spot-on. Also, I'll add to what he said about the ending. With the whispering of the creature, it seems anti-climactic because it's very ambiguous. It's not really something to be afraid of. It starts a mystery in the mind of the reader, only to be immediately cut-off. The wording of the whispering should probably be changed/elaborated, with something else happening afterwards, that makes this event more intense.