Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-16095227-20150429051424/@comment-25037895-20150429082328

Here's what I think:


 * 1) The conversation wasn’t the reason the reason for john’s annoyance Repeated phrase. Take out "the reason".


 * 1) it was driving john mad Capitalize "John.


 * 1) lot of work that needs to be done” Missing punctuation. Add a period at the end.


 * 1) a sorrowful manner, “do (Do) you have any Capitalize the first letter of the quotation.


 * 1) pills I can take, sir(?)” Missing question mark


 * 1) a groundbreaking procedure” Again, missing period at the end of the sentence.


 * 1) his hands and put on these surgical gloves on Repeated the word "on".


 * 1) He then to (took) out a large knife and stitches from one of his closet


 * 1) reasons why they revoked my license” his boss Missing comma.


 * 1) nauseas (nauseous)


 * 1) station and that is what all it took Take out the word, "what".


 * 1) all the police officer(s)


 * 1) encircling around their necks Either wording is fine, buy encircling around their necks is awkward wording. You could even put, "encircled around their necks.