Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150529193644/@comment-26326346-20150530185252

@ Grizzly: Yeah, the notification thing is pretty useless and doesn't work for me for periods of time.

Those are some questions that I hadn't considered. I made a lot of assumptions that were rather foolish when I wrote the poem, one of them being that I wouldn't have to really flesh things out. I do agree with you though, that would definitely make it better.

I might turn it into a story if I can't get it to work as a poem, don't know yet. I'd just like to do a poem because it's rather new to me. Empyre gave me some suggestions on what poems I might study, so I am going to go do that. Thanks again Grizzly! I really appreciate the honest feedback, it was really helpful to me. I'd always rather have critical feedback than being followed by "Yes-Men" :)

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@Banning: I'll see if I can't get the pacing down. If not, I'm going to revise the whole poem and I'll scrap it in favor of starting fresh failing that. I'm going to experiment with it quite a bit and try to add some backstory for the psycho character's motivations. It might end up being another story, but I'll make a poem eventually XD

Thank you for the feedback as well. I'm going to make this the best quality that I can before I put it out :)