Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24983266-20140525190232/@comment-24961441-20140525210853

A couple of things mate:

1. Minor grammar issues here and there (Missing out a letter or putting the wrong punctuation in certain areas.)

2. Some "Miscalculations" of characters events, e.g. Scott is introduced as if we knew him from the car, however he was not in the car.

3. "my car is in the alley you passed on the way here" what alley? I don't remember you mentioning an alley.

4. You have a lot of characters, yet you have only really described Sam. You have mentioned what the others wear and their accents but you havent written about the characters

Other than that, plot is interesting and gripping. Could be a little shorter, but that is just my opinion.

Needs a little work, but overall quite well done. :)