Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27531979-20160103203900/@comment-26475800-20160120043507

I am not much of a poet, but I can tell you that there are some areas where the flow is off. The syllable count was lost somewhere in the middle of the poem and never really picked back up. That is what I have to say with the technique, but it was just what stood out to me, and if I knew more about poems I would let you know exactly using the nomenclature, but I did the best I could to explain it to you.

The story that you were telling wasn't anything special, you are telling a murder story. The way you told it was rather fresh, but the point still remains you are working on something that has been done for ages. It has been so popular in books, TV and film that if you are going to write something about crazy killers you need to bring something new.