Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24881951-20150802101945/@comment-17118109-20150802230110

It's a very good story. I especially like the sudden switch. There are just a few issues.

I'd consider rewording the part where he freaks out after finding the dead person and it says he sees and hears "ghosts." I say this just because at first it looks like you're trying to add random ghosts to the story and it kind of threw me off. Maybe just changing a few words would help.

There are also some grammar mistakes and typos that you should be able to catch by going over it again, but I'll point them out if you'd like.