Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24982950-20170505155251/@comment-32461413-20170710030453

The Cyborg Pie wrote: Thank you for the reply, I was worried this post had bumped.

Yes, the deadline has passed, but I do want to redo this story. The grammar I can sort out, the speech was a formatting error, but I'll look at the commas as suggested. I was exactly three words under the limit for the competition, which didn't give me any room to explain certain things such as Andrew's involvment, which I agree is lacking. As for what flew in through the window, that was supposed to be the bat that Andrew took a picture of, I will make that clearer in the redraft. Also I plan with the increased length to add some much needed spookiness, and do the shooting justice by by taking a more step-by-step approach.

Thanks again for your feedback, this is one of my personal favourites that I've written, glad to see you lked it!

I'm glad you enjoyed my feedback! I enjoyed your story and I would love to see its completed form. I wish you luck on your revisions as well as your future works.