Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25901297-20141221131514/@comment-25769703-20141221205258

The first paragraph outlines it's generic similarity with other 'Mental illness' pasta's. If you left mystery to what his occupation was i think it would create a better story. Nonetheless, it's below the standards of what i would call a pasta.

For older readers 'Tragedy' clearly has flaws the title, like the name itself is associated with 1999 song by the steps and by the bee gees.

A pasta is meant to be scary. When you wrote in your closing paragraph 'i am tragedy' i couldn't help but laugh.

There is no suspense, everything flows normally like you are giving me a chain of events one after another. The 'collect souls' part made me cringe. I am like HA K..

It also reminds me of skyrim, take the axe wear this mask and cause havoc...

If you get what i mean...

It needs work to even get noticed. A solid 3/10 - by my standards

Your writing standards are good

Story is not as original as i would like for it to be.

Fear factor, I was not even scared I laughed and cringed at certain parts because of how 'generically' similar it was to other pastas.

Hope this helps.

I don't want to be confronted by an evil demon of somesort giving me magical powers to cause havoc on the world. It's like something from Marvel or DC if you get what i mean. And 'Lucifer' the most common enemy of everyone if it was a idk a demon from the somoan lands i would be intrested but Lucifer... we heard it all.