Talk:Walburton Park/@comment-24908159-20140516201327

Dammmmn, what a conclusion man. really impressive stuff. if i had to give you any constuctive criticism most of what i would say is work with your talents. You have an especially good imagination which helps the reader really visualize everything that curtis and sylvester are experiencing. There are some parts that are not necessarily lacking but could be strengthened. Like i said, all around i really enjoyed this story however, i just sensed a bit of cliche when i read of the dieing zombie like children, just a bit. i feel like your imagery is quite remarkable and therfor would hope that the reveal of these monsters would be slightly more unexpected. i hope this criticism does not insult you because i believe you are a talented author, but i must speak my mind. thanks for the good read.