Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26097843-20150215185753

Thomas and sam were very good friends. They were around the age of 16 and half way through their sophomore year of high school. Both really liked doing extracurricular school activities such as drama and football.

One exceptionally boring day, thomas was in Gym and saw there would be a field trip to a ski resort. Thomas thought this was really cool considering that his school didn’t do things like this very often. then he saw the price for admission was around $50 so he might have to pitch in for Sam considering that he was the only one with a job between the two of them. He told Sam about the field trip and sam decided he would like to go although thomas would have gone with or without him.

Weeks had gone by since that day and it was time for the trip. they waited impatiently for the instructor to finish saying the rules and once that was done they darted to the nearest lift to find it completely packed with people. disappointed and in no mood to waste time they wandered around a bit to find another lift.they had been walking for what felt like hours when they happened across a second lift. this surprised them considering the large bustling crowd that sounded loud enough to block out an exploding building was but a faint whisper caught in the wind.

“Hmm”, said thomas curiously. “does this old thing even work?”

“Well sure it does,”replied sam,”we just have to start up the power.”



They searched for a bit and found a on/off lever on the control panel. Too excited to wait, Thomas was about to push the button when suddenly they heard an ear shattering scream for help from what sounded like a little girl coming from the very top car of the lift. the scream was so sudden that it caused Sam to fall flat on his back and thomas to whirl around so fast he popped his neck. needless to say neither were happy.

“HEY! IS SOMEBODY UP THERE?” Sam yelled after dusting the snow from his jacket. He then dialed 911 for an ambulance.

<span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Then another scream was heard that was equally loud. Thomas finally decided to bring the lift down to see who it was they both slowly awaited the cart’s descent when suddenly it stopped about nine feet up.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“hey give me a boost, will ya.” Sam said to Thomas

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“sure thing.” replied Thomas.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Thomas gave Sam a boost up to the cart with ease.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“Hey, dude, could you help that kid out already? Come on before she freezes to death!”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“There’s no one to help!”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“What the hell do you mean there’s no one to help?!”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Exactly what I just said! I mean there. Is. No. One. To. Help!”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“then what is there?”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“just a…...pink coat with the initials…..ks.”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;text-indent:36pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“just great.”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;text-indent:36pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Just then the ambulance pulled up as if on cue. they asked what the problem was and they told their story. Of course they didn’t believe them. but by the time they finished they were showing the very early stages of frostbite and the two boys were driven back to the resort lodge. they were chewed out by the sheriff for making a false call to the authorities and were luckily let off with a warning. As the two boys were leaving they noticed a newspaper clipping. It Said:

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;text-indent:36pt;"><span style="font-size:40px;font-family:'TimesNewRoman';color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Young Girl Falls To Her Death At Local Ski Resort

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Young Katheryn Sims was on the very top car of the ski lift when she suddenly fell to her death and <span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">(story continued on A2)

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">They couldn’t find the rest of the story but they found a photo of a young girl wearing a small pink coat.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;text-indent:36pt;">''' '''

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Over a year had passed and that day had become a wisp of wind in the back of their minds never to be remembered.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Thomas and Sam were hanging out one weekend and playing video games when suddenly they heard a little girl’s voice that they hadn’t heard for a very long time say,”why didn’t you help me?” They were startled by this and started to look around. Thinking it was just part of the game they shrugged it off. Then they heard it again only this time it somehow felt menacing, “Why didn’t you help me.” the two of them whirled around to find a little girl in a pink coat standing there. suddenly an awful transformation happened as her head started to twist in impossible directions and her spine twisted and snapped and an inhuman evil smile formed on what was once a happy little girl’s face.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“WHY DIDN’T YOU HELP ME!” it was screaming demonically and Thomas and Samuel started to scream for their lives.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">A few hours later Sam’s mom came in to check on them but found two large blood stains on the floor. she called the police and they were reported missing. a few days went by until the police investigated the scene. They found no sign of a struggle or forced entry.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;text-indent:36pt;"><span style="font-size:15px;font-family:Arial;color:#f3f3f3;font-weight:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">All they found was a small pink coat.

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