Talk:The Nice Guy/@comment-25064879-20141205195621

The back-and-forth dialogue between the characters was perfect, like, really believable. It got a little lost during the telling of the story, Frank saying a lot of things in a way somebody telling a story wouldn't really say, but describing a tale though a character's dialogue can be pretty tricky, so you did pretty well considering. Also, I'm probably being extra picky on that simply because the back-and-forth dialogue in the intro was so well done.

A couple of things that could have been connected better, though... I'm not sure this story of Phil and all is very relevant to the guy complaining about tuna sandwiches. That connection could have been made a lot better. Also, some more explanation as to why exactly the manager was so determined to break Phil would do well.

And the murder. Sometimes, less is more.

Though I'm just picking at little things. All in all, the story is pretty good and I like the twist - that part, at least, isn't overdone. Writing style is quite captivating for the most part.

7.5/10