User blog comment:EmpyrealInvective/So You Want to Make the Audience Cry?/@comment-26268104-20151001215437/@comment-24101790-20151001221336

Really play up the interactions between the father and son, build emotional backstories, but the best advice I can give would be to take it to the writer's workshop before uploading it as they can tell you whether it is effective or not and if there're any issues present.