Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5462912-20170821101838/@comment-7673575-20170824153550

The ending is less of a kick and more of a nudge as it is right now. Needs to be explained a bit more. If you yourself haven't told me that Daniel is insane, I never would have figured it out (of course, I tend to overthink, which may also be the issue).

And of course, rivers of blood don't scare people anymore, but making the description of devouring of Red Girl a bit more graphical would certainly add up to the scare factor.