Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20160222063720/@comment-27012445-20160309142848

I really can't argue with any of the points you made. Thank you though for identifying the areas that did work and gave a slight impression of what I was trying to achieve. I definitely can see how there was a rambling flavor to the dialogue. However, the narration of this story wasn't too bad. https://youtu.be/Caugm9PqKk0 thanks