Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20190829215235/@comment-35711173-20190903014603

Hi,

The last paragraph works better now, but I have to question these sentences.

Then she felt a sharp prickling on the back of her neck and a sibilant whisper in her ear, “The Old Gods are not to be mocked. Ye cannot deceive us, and we will not permit you to mock us with pretended instead of real services.”

Ye - plural familiar nominative case Old English form of you. Thou would be singular familiar nominative.

The first paragraph describes a tea party. What sort of religious service is this that is composed of "a tidy assortment of English-style biscuits (cookies), small cakes, and scones?"