Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180503165213/@comment-34823985-20180503182048

Um, you've called some of my plotlines weird. Well, I'm rubber and you're glue. Fwiiip! Of course, people soup is pretty freaky, and therefore fits the site well. I never feel like there are enough severed heads in my soup. I'm just waiting for that one can that's mostly severed heads. Oh, and instead of a fly in the soup you give us an eye? (hehe, and a guy) Yes, I'm done with the jokes. On with the show!

I do wish you had gotten to the point a little quicker. The confusion, and wtf atmosphere when he's blind starts to drag a little. Well, it did for me anyways. It did make me anxious if that's what you were going for. -- Where is this going?... Oh, wtf!... Uh, blind again, hmmm. How long is this go... Oh, fuck! --

Sensory deprivation is an effective scare tactic.

Some of your sentences need to be fixed a bit. Example: Luckily, my bathroom includes both the toilet seat and the showering booth. - He has a full bath! (assuming there's a sink in there too)

Maybe you could bring it back to the flu again at the end. I mean, if he really believes the flu he had was the catalyst for what he experienced then what measures does he take now to avoid getting sick again. That's all I can come up with, but feel free to ask me about any specific issues, and I'll try to address them.