Talk:The Witch & The Wedding Gift/@comment-25941663-20170630160220

This was a very good read. The twist with Martin was great and caught me by surprise, and Robert's fate hit me hard, since I had gotten to like him a lot.

Everything was great, but I have one issue: Pacing. Everything seemed to go a bit too fast after the first section (with Robert meeting Evellyn). The meeting with the witch-woman, the walking through the shitty river, Robert's demise, Martin's chase, everything was too fast. I believe it would have been much better if you dragged out each section a bit, adding more detail in your description and scenes. Little things could have added up to something better. For example, when Martin is chasing the woman, you could have written how he chased her through the mud only to lose her momentarily. He would lean with a hand against a wall or something, hearing, catching a whimper, or footsteps echoing. This little scene would have given more weight to the chase and made the overall piece better.

Apart from that, it was really good and really interesting. But the quick pace didn't allow the reader to settle and immerse themselves in the story as much as I would have liked.