Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181009025331/@comment-9041013-20181009171846

Alright, read the two last parts as I was on my way to work this morning, might've missed a few technical issues; so proofread, proofread, proofread - based on previous experiences.

Plotwise, part eight and nine are both very decent, like the whole of this novel. Yes, it's a novel by this point, or a long novella, or will be a novel in the end. Overall it's very decent, though I have some issues with the eighth part, when The Nameless pulled Ben's eye out of it's socket why did you mention muscles being torn out, the eye ball has none. It's a gooey semi liquid thing.

Also, if The Nameless is such a big deal why did he have to use an object to pull out a kids eye? be more creative, make him use his body or the serroundings even, bending physics and such. Make him use a sort of telepathy even to yank the eye out of its place without touching it.

I like the notion of a dream being very realistic, more so than the character's reality - I did it with a story about a Wendish God of Nightmares.

As for part nine, I don't have any issues with this one. The Pedo truck driver is kind of well, unoriginal, but whatever, it makes sense, it's not ruining anything. It's just been done before. Kind of makes sense as well too, if you look around the net, crazier stuff had happened in the early 2000s.

So yeah, take your break for a tad, before coming up with the refined drafts of the next volume.