Talk:Playing with the Wolf/@comment-27007772-20150220195435

The pasta was a good idea. You took the challenge I gave you- a simple fairytail, and reversed it. Having the character often seen as an innocent small child be revealed as a twisted maniac, one greater than the supposed villain, was a good twist.

Plot- 3/3

The story had grammar issues. "I'm still hunger" being among my favorites. It seems as if you were a bit too urgent to get this story out in time, as it stands. Some of the writing is chaotic, which I really do like. I makes it feel as if we are hearing exactly what the wolf is thinking, though some parts don't fit in.

Grammar- 2/3

The most important part, the creepiness. The creepiness is where this pasta falls short. It was a more demented story than some others, but it didn't have the certain scare factor, I, as a judge, was looking for.

Creepiness- 1/4

Final score 6/10