Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44781210-20200126141542

Ello! UserID here!

This is the first draft of the first creepypasta I'm writing. I would appreciate some critiques before I decide to post.

'''The Earth is a simple planet. It rotates on a spindly axis, bright lands of green and white dotting its pure blue surface. It is rather beautiful, I dare say, much more than any of the other lands beyond. The only glittering jewel in a collection of dull stones. Nothing else in the universe can outmatch its natural magnificence.'''

'''However, I do see a problem with it. It’s with a species that inhabit it, known as Humans.'''

'''They treat their beautiful planet like rubbish. I’ve seen it with my own eyes: they throw rolled up tobacco to the ground after they’re done smoking it. They leave lightweight plastic to fly once all of their newly bought food comes into their houses. Pesticides, I’ve  noticed, have been one of the main reasons fish are dying. I assume they’ve come to think of Earth as not their planet that gives them life, but the galaxy’s largest trash can.'''

'''Even so, despite the Humans having more control over the Earth than anything else, they continue to conquer lands sacred to millions of animals. Their power tools take away everything in its path. Machines continue to build new land for them. More and more animals slowly succumb and meet their end. Habitats grow smaller and smaller. Although they own domesticated animals for themselves, they don’t care about wilder, freer ones. Extinction is a Human-made word created not very long ago, because now, they’re the main reason for it.'''

'''I could even see them treating their newly-obtained land much worse than they should. In a simple driveby, factories came into my view every fifty miles. Their tubes emit noxious gases which wards birds away, even past the closest water source. They use them to find petroleum, the only fuel for cars, and the only way anyone can power up their homes. The gas that comes from burning petroleum causes temperatures to rise. Ice in their polar regions melt more and more. So far, no effort has been done to stop this.'''

'''The monstrosities done to this world are simply too horrifying to watch. They all act oblivious to the fact that their planet is dying. They know the effects, but they don’t want to stop. They want to watch it collapse under their claws. If and when they move on to more, the Humans will become the unstoppable force destroying the universe.'''

'''There has only been one solution. An effective solution, I dare say, but it has never been done, so I’m curious to see how it turns out.'''

'''Termination. It’s always that word that many would call destructive but inevitable. Clearly, the Humans are the tip top of Earth’s food chain, so why should that be a problem? The small bloodsucking insects can easily find other food sources to infect with their parasitic diseases.'''

But what is my reasoning, you may ask, to completely annihilate the entire Human race?

'''Humans have caused nothing but misery to our sapphire jewel. It’s slowly, deliberately, becoming one of the dull stones it resides with due to flying plastic and burning petroleum. The entire universe knows about these Humans and their terrible ways. They continue to seek more ways to kill the Earth, as if causing mass extinctions and deforestation isn’t enough. They have an irrepressible desire to destroy, to murder every other species inhabiting it. However, once the Humans are long gone, then more care will be taken in restoring beauty Earth once had.'''

'''A disease has been created. A highly contagious disease that will infect one Human after another, causing great suffering and then death. Air, water, fumes, everything will cause them to buckle to their own demise. They caused this, after all. They caused their suffering and many others.'''

'''We will kill every last human and take no prisoners. Babies, children, adults, elderly, they all must die. They all must understand the consequences of their own actions. '''

'''Meanwhile, my own will repopulate. We will destroy every last bit of what humans have created. Habitats will be rebuilt, animals will return to their once lost lands, and, most importantly, there will be freedom. Such freedom for all of them from the Humans’ tyrannic reign. Earth will glow brighter than ever once we inhabit it. It’s its destiny, after all, to be the most magnificent planet out of every other one in the universe.'''

'''The plague will be unleashed tomorrow. I hope you will be there to watch the Humans meet their fate.'''  