Talk:Harvest/@comment-26030957-20171031152933

WEREWOLF CONTEST SCORE RESULTS:

An old-timey werewolf tale that asks if humanity isn't more monstrous than actual monsters and speaks of how the beast within may be triggered by awakening sexuality and conversely a father’s love. Excellent story.

NARRATIVE HOOK/INCITING INCIDENT: The livestock on a small farm is being mysteriously slaughtered at night and left in front of their house. No dillydallying, this is front and center in the opening sentences. Well done. 10.

ORIGINALITY: While some of the topics have been done before, for instance, slaughtered animals in Stephen King’s novella Cycle of the Werewolf, and menstruation in Ginger Snaps, the overall feel and style felt very fresh. 9.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: Excellent job here. All of the characters were deeply examined and studied. Everyone had distinct personalities. 10.

DIALOGUE: Dialogue should be action that moves the story forward. Never something passive. I believe the argument between the rich boy and Anna really shows this. However, I would have liked to have seen a bit more between the father and daughter. 9.

EXECUTION: Pretty brilliant. The characters were stated right away, the narrative took off. Great pacing. No spelling, grammar or punctuation mistakes at all. A couple very minor typos. “Of” was repeated in this sentence: “We’re full of of sin and lust.” One sentence slipped into present tense by having, “he says” instead of “he said.” The verb “lept” is very archaic and hasn’t been used much since the 16th century, should probably be “leapt.” Really minor stuff. 9.

ENDING/DENOUMENT: The ending felt a little rushed and forced. But it did have a great last line. “It’s time you know what you are.” Very nice. 9

OVERALL CREEPINESS: This story had a feeling of impending doom and dread from the first sentence. Very creepy. The mother staring out the window, shutting the door and securing it with a chair. But even more than creepy, some parts were downright scary and even terrifying. The image of the father devouring a pig, a young girl about to be raped. “It’s the devil come to reap.” Great stuff here! 10.

FINAL SCORE: 66 out of 70