Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28420405-20160518174633/@comment-28266772-20160520145002

I enjoyed this second draft much more! I think this is a good story, and it's up to you if you'd rather wait for more feedback, but I, personally, think this meets quality standards and that you could submit it. I'm not an admin though, so really it's their decision. Still, I think this is a well written story and the changes you've made have done a lot to improve the structure, and make it overall more creepy and unsettling.

Only one thing is you spelt "accident" as "accidnet". I don't know if this is on purpose or not (because it's written by the murderer who may not actually have the best literacy skills), but I thought I'd point it out anyway.