Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25361316-20141108230948/@comment-25226524-20141109004508

Yeah, I definitely wouldn't scrap the character, as you did well with it. If you interject him into another scenario, I could see it working well. I always recommend posting in the workshop before submission, but I would especially suggest it in this instance, due to the writing style. I have a story up that has strong backwoods dialect with terrible grammar, but it's of course intentional, and I posted it here first so I could get an admin to sign off on it before I uploaded it. This will keep your story from being deleted for looking like it's poorly written, even though the mistakes/style are intentional. If you do write another and put it here, just ask an admin to take a look at it, and they'll give you the red or green light.

P.S. Your character reminds me of the spoiled rich kid from the new American Horror Story Freakshow series. He's really immature and lives in a fantasy world, even though he's an adult. Check out the show sometime if you haven't, it's pretty decent (Wed. nights at 10).