Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25506761-20141011131848/@comment-25439157-20141011141724

Ahhhh I like the idea of this. And the way it's been executed, although I think the angel should narrate it in simple present, too. Unless he's narrating it to someone later or has a good reason to use past tense.

The ending is pretty damned good. It's all these amazing and shocking punchlines wow how do people come up with them?

One last thing I have to say about the story is that the angel (that's what I shall call it) sounds sinister and evil. Too much. Sort of like when people narrate murders from the killer's point of view and he sounds like a flat character. A calmer personality, in my opinion, would suit it better.