Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26600200-20150712181523/@comment-26007602-20150712224920

Here's a tip for future stories: creepypastas about creepypastas almost always fail. The "meta" references don't work and just aren't scary. Your story will be instantly deleted for mentioning other creepypasta characters, because that violates the no spin off rule. I don't think I've ever seen a successful story that uses the creepypasta site in it. You could try to rework this around some other website, but there are other issues as well.

This does need a proofread as well, because it's riddled with punctuation and spacing errors that hold the story back. The story is fairly generic (kid with imaginary friend that kills people has been done a lot), and doesn't really stand out besides the use of the creepypasta site which will warrant its deletion. Your character seems to flip flop between believing Max to be real and to be imaginary. If you're attempting to show this character's mental deterioration (from reading horror stories, which is fairly ridiculous), you need to expand upon it, because this current version just has an inconsistent character.