Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28420405-20160705203714/@comment-28266772-20160706125401

This was an awesome story. Couldn't see many problems. I'l list what I found below.

all the rest of the world -> I think this is a bit redundant. Either 'the rest of the world' or 'all of the world' would do.

more awful -> this follows on from a bit of repetition about his mother's cooking. Plus I always thought something couldn't be 'more bad' or 'more awful' but could only be 'worse'. Either way, might not hurt to switch it out.

gaped -> I think this is meant to be gasped but I'm not sure

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So yeah I simply could not find any other mistakes. Outside of that I thought this was a great story that was terribly sad, but also genuinely frightening. Really enjoyed it.