Talk:Bon Bon/@comment-24464378-20150404194525

The story had a few grammerical errors here and there, and it was a bit hard to read at some points, but, all in all, I think you did great. This story is suprisingly good for how short it is and I think it has potential. I think if you fix the errors and make it a bit easier to read, it could easily be a 10/10 story.

My rating, 7.5/10. I love the twist ending on this one, it was enjoyable to read, fix the errors though.