Talk:The Expressionless/@comment-28542849-20160524191002

4/10,its a good story idea,but theres alot missing for it to become a actual Story in my opinion.

Like already said,giving the entity actual Personality would make it more interesting

The Doctors / Surgeons also should have a Backstory and a longer Encounter with "The Emotionless" or more Encounters to make this a good Story.

The part with the Kitten ("Your mom just ate my Dog!"--"Not all of it....:"[Good old Peter Jackson])and the "I am God"  were a bit over the top and ridicolous imo tho.(The Second could just be due to a Image of "Spooky" Sanik being burned in my Head associated with that,its hard not to luagh seeing that in Front of your inner Eye.).