Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140916233219/@comment-25052433-20140919022928

Well, let's scratch our itches with the pointed edges of a review.

What went right:

-You nailed some very relatable concepts here. A lot of people suffer from OCD and similar types of mental issues, and I think you touched on that feeling very well here. While I have never personally dealt with such issues, I have known a few people that have, and the way you sum up the character's plight in this story works well.

-The idea of being a prisoner is scary to anyone. The idea of being a prisoner of your own mind and condition is terrifying on a whole different level. To be locked in a cage of your own making, unable to escape, is enough to give me goose bumps while thinking about it. Well done on concept here.

-The ending here was spot on. The fact that this person was actually welcoming death as a means to escape their condition was morbid in its own right, but to spin it around to have the character continue to suffer, even in death, was brilliant. A very twisted ending that was a satisfying conclusion to a quality pasta. Well done.

What is making me itch:

-Honestly I am hard pressed to think of anything that should be changed here. Part of me wants to argue that the ending was a bit harsh. The character didn't seem to have done anything in life to deserve such a hellish and twisted punishment in death. However, I think this ending is also paramount to capping this story off in the right way, morbid and scary. So, on that note, I would say leave it as it is, and let this one just be the dark and disturbing masterpiece that it is.

Overall, excellent story. Well done.