Talk:Too Many Roses/@comment-26030957-20150312020228

Very impressive. Your writing was excellent. The first few paragraphs really brought your character to life. I liked that you opened with a nursery rhyme, it seemed to set a tone for the man who can not stop being a child. The title and the recurring theme of the mother's perfume were well executed, wrapping the story up with that theme at the end- nice. It was a thoroughly enjoyable read. Unfortunately, it was not scary or creepy at all. Even the violent ending felt more like a morality tale than a work of horror. Good story but I'm not quite sure if it is exactly creepypasta.

Keep up the good work and let me know when you write another one.

A relatively minor thing, I think you might have rushed the ending a bit and there were a few grammar mistakes in the second to last paragraph. In the second sentence you need to take out the "doing" and change "yelled" to "yelling". Also, "His head lolled to the side as I trying to wake him" should read, " His head lolled to the side as I TRIED to wake him".