Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25769703-20141204165649

With my extensive knowledge of the holocaust i decided to do a semi true story with real medical/jager report then my sister said to me it sounds alot like the russian sleeping experiment then we had an arguement after i had read that russsian sleeping experiement and i was like its a hoax etc after arguing i decided to just shut up... and come here for help :c i need help to change it around and make it more original.





Torture, is to inflict pain and suffering to someone or something…

Isolated in a bunker in the USA in 1948, the last days of the Einsatzgruppen Trails, each individual had been sentenced to death. The recordings and documents found highlights the many atrocities that had occurred as a result of the SS. These soldiers were held in what was called the cage.

The Warden, also known as the rigid one, was the one man and one man alone who was to monitor these ten men. He understood the various psychological damages inflicted by the mass killings. He accessed these medical files; watching them twenty four hours a day for the next twenty days. The warden’s cage, by the name is a fortified cage containing two bunk beds, with not even a feet of space between the two. They had one toilet, no running water and no food. It was not enough to fit ten men, but the warden did not care

The warden monitored their actions they were faced with claustrophobia, these cramped in conditions similar or worse than the Jews of the ghetto these men slept on top of each other. The toiletry was rusted; there was no running water, nothing to bathe in. Food was to be served on the fifth day. The toilet had been blocked so they could not escape through the sewage pipes. They were  Bare with no clothes, they remained in the beds until further notice.

Each individual charge is as follows, crimes against humanity, war crimes and finally membership of a criminal organisation…  Human rights no longer applied to these men.

Their behaviours was monitored in case something happened, they were silent not speaking a word to each other. “Schiesse!” one said moving back and forth grabbing his ears.

Each of these Einsatzgruppen individuals were at the last days ten days to be exact.

Ten days….

Warden log one, these are the facts and nothing but the facts. What you hear from no one is the truth.

<span style="font-size:10.5pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "Arial","sans-serif";color:#252525;background:white">Medical analysis of subject 1, he reportedly had nervous breakdowns over the executions… he recalled flashbacks of him strangling and murdering children, in attempts to conserve ammunition.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "Arial","sans-serif";color:#252525;background:white">Subject 2, began to squirm, he had been hospitalised in 1943 years prior to the trails, he was hospitalised due to his reaction to the killings of his unarmed civilians.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "Arial","sans-serif";color:#252525;background:white">The others suffered from serious stomach problems including liver congestion, anxieties inflammation of the brain which caused sleeplessness.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "Arial","sans-serif";color:#252525;background:white">However the final patient… he was different he wrote to Heinrich Himmler, that he was suffering from hallucinations connected with the shooting of the Jews which he himself carried out with sheer brutality. He recalls shooting a mother who jumped of her burning house breaking her two legs while holding a baby. He executed them both leaving their bodies to burn in the house they had once called home.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "Arial","sans-serif";color:#252525;background:white">Everything was recorded… the ones they had killed were recorded on the Jager document. In other words each men were haunted by the ghosts of the ones they had killed.

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<p class="MsoNormal">The warden pinned the document on the wall, at the site of it one of the soldiers tried moving the toilet seat in attempts to break free smashing it against the cage, nothing happened. He screamed as the toilet shattered releasing the feeses to the ground. He was covered in it. He recalled a voice telling him to “do it, shoot, shoot and kill!”

<p class="MsoNormal">He turned to his comrade throwing the sharp remains of the toilet on him him… murder had been committed as the others only looked on, in their own worlds silently gazing.

<p class="MsoNormal">The warden smiled…

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<p class="MsoNormal">The fifth day had come a rotting pig carcass was thrown into the cage. Each of the men grouped up staring at it, it began to bleed. They began devouring the flesh of the dead pig, one of the soldiers glared at the warden. They began to have clear boils on there faces there eyes had blood clots. The pig meat had maggots, the men ate it without question. Blood spilled onto the floor, mixing with the feeses the men began to fall and slip as they returned to their beds.

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<p class="MsoNormal">The day before the trails, the pigs meat had maggots emanating from the uneaten meat, the toilet had been overflowed with feeses, the soldier with eyes blod shod looked at it… he smiled. He went over to the feses, he started playing with the maggots as they entered the deceased soldiers body. The stench would have been unbareable by now, but somehow the soldier the nine soldiers managed to stay alive. After four days of silence, one spoke. “This is the conditions they lived in, these are the conditions we learned to like… we and the Jews are not so different.”

<p class="MsoNormal">One soldier exploded banging his head against the bunk bed, he began screaming, suddenly he began to spas out as another soldier joined him, and he fell to the ground and began to roll over the maggots and blood before thrusting his virile member into the dead pig. The demented howls of these psychotic men could be heard even through the glass casing they had been kept in. Then everything went silent. The lights were now switched off… and the warden locked the doors and did not return he left a paper saying his work was done… the tests continued for five more days, this time in complete darkness.

<p class="MsoNormal">Another man had gone in, he was untrained, he began writing his reports from day one, day one of darkness.

<p class="MsoNormal">Day one of complete darkness, all that could be heard is sudden crunching and yelps. <ac_metadata title="Help This is a work in progress (critique and how to change it and make it more original)"> </ac_metadata>