Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24765745-20141229142405/@comment-24765745-20150109163955

Ok, um.. that isn't what I hoped for to be honest but I do appreciate the review so thanks for that first.

Maybe you can say what exactly I need to overwrite, is the charackter itself ok? Of course I would go over her again but I mean the basic concept.

And what about the atmosphere, is it there? I guess not if its to overdone and cliche lol.

As the the grammer, you're right english isn't my first language but I thought you could at least understand what I mean... apparently not. But I guess I yould work something out in that direction.

Hope you understand at least this text and again thanks for the review