Talk:The Big D/@comment-24304936-20141120125617/@comment-24304936-20141120152247

I see. You still might want to do some tweaking to the story though. I think the breadcrumbs you provide alluding to the finale are a bit too large. As I said, I was pretty much able to figure out the guy was dead very early on, as this is a common theme for many stories on the site. Like I said, this is not badly written at all, it just needs the "obvious" factor turned down significantly.

Just my opinion :)