Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28060931-20161219211715/@comment-31532017-20161222144614

Ha Ha, no worries my friends; I'll be sure to remind you about it when I finish drafting my latest story. I think I understand why you have the mindset of streamlining sentences, you're trying to quickly force us into the creepy/scary moments of the story which I think is the issue.

Try doing this instead, while developing those non-scary moments; try incorporate the protagonists/characters feelings as much as possible without being irrelevant to the entire story. That way, you can achieve the pacing and balancing part easily without spending too much time and effort.

As for the commas, I didn't knew that; I think that disregard what I said about it.