Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25326117-20150226190029/@comment-25148755-20150226230031

Huh, lots of poetry on the workshop lately. Ok, for this one I feel like the title doesn't really apply. A burglar is someone who commits theft by force, and there's not really anything to that here. As far as the actual poem goes...5/10? There's not really a whole lot for me to go on here. It's free verse and flows ok but there's nothing particularly satisfying about it from a poetic standpoint...nothing about the language or the balance of the events happening in the poem really elevate this over anything but average. It's vanilla...nameless narrator haunted by nameless phantoms whispering his nameless misdeeds into his ears. The last two lines were the high point, suggesting an interesting balance between the narrator unable to live without his antagonists and hoping they might not show up (does he want to die?) so that was cool.