Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24841494-20140320153917/@comment-24304936-20140331132951

Aside from some spelling mistakes and clunky comma usage, I actually like where you are going with this.

It almost has a dark fantasy meets David Lynch feel to it. Which really hasn't been done yet (that I've seen anyway).

But I feel there is alot that needs to be done since so much is left unexplained thus far. This might have to be a long pasta in order to iron out everything you have here. Keep going though. I'm anxious to see how our little friend gets to where he goes :)