Talk:The Rope in the Barn/@comment-23779196-20140313123113

Wait a minute. Wait.. a fucking... minute... I'm gonna be that guy right now. That guy that criticizes every little detail. Please excuse this though, I only mean to help. First of all, a little too cliche. Like, nearly every ghost cliche in the book. Someone dies, soul gets stuck somewhere, someone moves in to the house near the place the first person died, and someone goes exploring, gets possessed, and the possessed person goes on with killing everyone with no real reason other than they want to. For no reason. If you're gonna write a creepypasta like this, give some detail to the characters. I barely remember them except for their names. They were so generic I didn't feel bad for them when they finally died. No detail, except for some random details about the possession itself and murdering the parents. The constant parenthesis seem to be there to remind us the ghost possesed the kid by showing his name in parenthesis next to "Bill" all the time and they in no way advance the plot. Why does the ghost want to kill all of humanity? How does he collect souls? Why did this guy just reandomly feel like killing the family as soon as they step onto the property? It says "Kill them carefully. Kill them creatively." Using a 2x4 with a few nails driven into it is not that creative. It's like using the cliche bat with nails weapon ini zombie games/movies. What's so careful about walking in the house and brutally murdering the kid's parents and proceeding to do the same exact thing over and over again to everyone he sees. How is he not caught? If he kills everyone he sees, that means there's gotta be a lot of people in the streets just walking around when he's around, meaning that he's killing them out in public, so people should be alarmed that some random person (assuming he keeps possessing random people to stay alive) is walking around killing everyone in his sight. Though the little details are kind of important, there's too many little details in this story and not enough big details that are actually important. I'm hoping you take my advice in mind when writing your next creepypasta, and have a nice day.