Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25188530-20140919011841

Okay, so I really wanted your opinion on the basic plot/outline of my first and new creepypasta! Note : It hasn't been posted yet, nor has it been fully developed! (if posts like this is against forum rules, really sorry! Feel free to take it down if it is!)

A friend who shall not be named had gone through an experience where she had seen a person who she had met up with about two years ago on the streets, she was a magician going by the name of (yes, this is a girls name) Jo-Jo. She typically did coin tricks and what-not for money, and after a while, Jo-Jo turns up on the streets again nearby her house, but this time she isn't performing for anyone, and her back was turned. Later on, the friend returns from a day of (still undetermined) errands or school, and walks into her house, finding one family member who lived in that house hanging in each room from a fan by their necks, counting up to one per room. She finds the magician (Jo-Jo) sitting in one of the rooms that didn't have anyone hanging in it, waiting in there with a brand new, unused rope hanging from the fan. Jo-Jo looks up, and says, "Remember when you flipped for heads?" That's when the friend makes a run for it and calls the cops.

That's all I have so far! Any feedback or advice will be greatly valued! 