Talk:Dead Air/@comment-24410237-20140219170314

Within your story you seemed to understand the base elements of a good pasta. I was happy to see there was no screaming about blood, or doom, or being lost to the world. No unnecessary grim elements with little rhyme or reason. You managed to create an air of unease without going to the easy well of cliches.

On to your writing, I  thought your use of descriptive language was above average for this site.  With that in mind there were some grammar mistakes and some personal pet peeves of mine, for example your opening would be better served without the modifier "dead" to accentuate your sleep, but overall I enjoyed the read. It was a nice open ended pasta with some overall effective writing.

7/10