Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24983266-20140525190232/@comment-24381191-20140530194418

It was ok, I guess, a little punctuation errors and typos here and there. I just wish you could have elaborated a little more on why her friends hated her.

Also, them killing their friend for a Devil sacrifice from a source they didn't even know was authentic and risking federal prison seems unconvincing.