Talk:ShadowSoul/@comment-26054278-20150207224002

This story would probably be decent, but there are many grammar errors, a couple spelling errors, and a few instances when you just say the wrong word (for example, you accidently said the word "phycologist" at one point, which refers to the study of algae and various organisms. I believe you meant to say "psychologist").

I believe you said this was your first story, so it is a good effort and a good concept, it just needs to be proof-read.