Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26432621-20150525122456/@comment-24101790-20150525144648

"I could hear those dreaded footsteps finally come into the room. I knew that the cops wouldn't get here in time. My daughter began to whimper Beside (beside) me, I quickly covered her mouth with my hand. But (avoid starting sentences with conjunctions) it (It) was too late, the closet door was ripped open.

"Ah(comma missing) there you are.""

A sign of a good micro story is that it has a concise plot, but allows the audience to fill in the blanks. The famous short story: "Baby shoes for sale: never worn." or "The last man on earth was alone in his room. Then there was a knock on the door." come to mind. This seems more like you tried to take a longer story and condense it into a much shorter story which really doesn't work as it is too vague. Why are they being pursued? Who is pursuing them? How is the (incorrectly capitalized) title "Final day" significant to the story?

Writing micro pastas are hard, it's why you don't see a lot of them on this site.