Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26095228-20150210150848/@comment-25226524-20150210175352

This is pretty well written, but I could take it or leave it. Pastas like these are a dime a dozen to be honest, and micro pastas are easily deleted if they don't offer something original. That closing line doesn't really make any sense to me either. Maybe that voice isn't just in my head - then where is it? I think you need to work on that ending for this to have much of a chance. Micro pastas need to pack more of a punch to justify their lack of development. I definitely see potential in your prose, but this story just isn't different enough in my opinion. If you can come up with a better ending this may be worth submitting, but as it is I think there's a good chance it would be deleted. Good luck with your future work. Keep writing.