Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20150808171231/@comment-25226524-20150809004331

I honestly enjoyed the story and don't really have any criticisms.

Being that you're looking for suggestions, I'll throw something out there to possibly chew on (and likely spit out):

What if before she falls into her rage, he hears her thoughts, and in her anger/despair she's considering trying to find a way to send her own curse to the culprit for revenge. He then says something stating that it wouldn't be wise/he couldn't let her do that because it would damn her in the next life as well, and then she tries to run. He would then be saving her from her earthly woes as well as eternal ones.

Not sure if it would really improve the story, but it popped into my head.