Talk:A Midsummer Night's Scream/@comment-25771007-20160730231601

This story was kind of messily written. At one point I just thought, why didn't the writer just write these two sentences on the same element next to each other instead of putting another sentence between them on a different subject?

Then there's the ending which is a clear sign of wanting to add an element that you thought of after having finished the writing process. You should have taken the time to insert it in the correct area instead of just plopping it down there. It doesn't make sense either; she saw someone watching her through the window and decided to watch TV as they watched her, then call all of her contacts at what seems like an improbable time seeing as her parents had still not woken up. Then she says that her parents woke up the next day, meaning that they slept about 31 hours. What?

Sloppy and wasn't thought through or planned out.

6/10