Talk:The Endeavor/@comment-26112985-20160120014530

This is awesome.

For the majority of this pasta, while I wasn't laughing out loud, I was just purely having fun. This was a joy to read, and you clearly have a knack for writing humourous pastas. I think my favorite part about the whole thing was the idea of having a serial novelist. The "Write what you know," concept was transcended into a whole new level. Sort of makes you think about where many of us will be given some time... hmmmm.

However, I think the largest flaw with the story has to do with the concept of a serial novelist itself. I don't think you perfectly captured what it's like to be inside of a mind that's sick enough to murder other people repeatedly. Then again, it's at least partially excusable because it sort of fits in with the whole campy feel I think you were going for here.

''"Matthew thought that the Devil would appreciate the deliciousness of the fourth wall nearly being broken and that would be enough to give him an edge over the other contenders." ''

I can't help but wonder what Banning thought when he read this line. Ha. Overall I give this a solid 8/10.