Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20180206223252/@comment-25170312-20180214225343

The last paragraph seems like it ends prematurely. I didn't get a proper sense of closure. One more sentence could help, but it has to feel like a last sentence. Not sure how to explain it exactly. Other than that, it's solid.

I do have two very specific suggestions. At the beginning, get rid of "in a album", and get rid of "constantly" as in "constantly mentioning Romeo and Juliet".

Good luck with the contest!