Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24783096-20140406173455

Hiya so this is my first time making a pasta and i'd like some help to make it better ^U^

  Cats... I guess i never was really fond of them and now i probably never will.It started a few years ago me and my sister where playing in the back yard with our dog jay.We lived in a small two story building with a medium sized lake in the back yard.I had accidentally thrown the dogs ball into the lake and he just jumped in after it leaving me and my sister laughing.

 We stopped after her a small faint mewl.We looked over to see a small Black Maine coon kitten staring at us with bright green eyes.As i said i never was fond of cats so I went back to watching jay try to swim after his ball.My sister however carefully stuck out her hand trying to get the kittens attention."Cassie look!"she poked me to show that the cats had put its paw on her hand."cool?" i guess i really couldn't share her excitement i mean Iv'e seen tons of animals that were taught the shake hands.Jay ran over to us holding his ball scaring the cat."Good boy."i laughed as my sister gave an annoyed sigh.

 Later that night i heard paw steps in coming to our room jay had always slept outside so I got up and woke my sister "Sam do you hear that" "hear what."we both looked over seeing that cat again trying to climb onto my sisters bed."Hey sweetie how did you get in here?" I watched my sister pick the cat up and place it down next to her."Sam you should get her out before jay starts barking"i knew if jay did that he'd wake mom and dad and we'd get in trouble for having a wild cat in the house."oh hush he's out side he's not gonna know she's in here I'll make sure she's out when I wake up" I didn't like the idea of that cat being in there something about it just didn't feel right.I watch as Sam went back to sleep and I noticed the cat was looking at me with her eyes narrowed.I shuddered turning away trying as hard as I could to fall asleep.

  The next morning I woke with a large scratch on my chest I wanted to say it was the cat but it was to big to be a cat scratch."Hey Sam."I started to wake my sister up as I noticed the cat was gone."What is it Cassie."She yawned sitting up in her bed."Did you take that cat out already?" she jumped out of bed fully awake now.We seemed to search the whole house searching for the thing but it seemed to vanish.We walked back up stairs only to hear our mother let out a shriek of terror outside.

  We quickly ran outside to find the horrific site of our dog jay.His stomach had been ripped out and his eyes gouged out with a large slash in his throat.I could feel tears pouring from my eyes as I saw my poor dog.I instantly collapsed to his side looking up only to see that cat witch what seemed to be hints of blood and its eye where red instead of the usual green color.I spent the rest of the day in my room I heard the door open to see my sister come in holding that cat."what is that thing doing here?"I asked angrily not wanting to see the god forsaken creature. "i told mom about her and she said she could stay" I looked at the cat for a minute then looked away "Just keep it away from me"I said laying back down in my bed slowly drifting to sleep.

  I woke hearing some odd shuffling "Sam please stop i cant sleep though all that-" I stopped when i noticed my sister wasn't in her bed. I turned the lights on And  instantly let out a terrified scream for what I saw on the floor in front of me was my sister body.It was in the same state my dog was in but there seemed to be something moving inside her.My heart Felt as if it stopped when I saw that damn cat come out of her ripped open chest it looked different though its right ear was ripped and the eyes where gone and it had red markings on it.

 The mangy thing slowly looked up at me and smiled cats don't usual smile but, thats not what scared me the most whats scared me was that it started laughing! I feel back laying against my bedroom wall as it seemed to come closer to me only stopping to pick up some hatchet like knife.As it got ready to pounce at me my dad quickly opened the door holding a kitchen knife.The cat gave an angered growl before jumping out the window i could feel bits of shattered glass hit my arm. I looked back at the broken window and knew id never forget that hell bound thing.  