Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25670699-20150104200303/@comment-25148755-20150105172959

Personally I'd just take out that whole first part. You don't come back to it at the end so really its only effect is to kind of spoil the suspense throughout the rest of the story since you know 1.) Sam gets caught and 2.) she is currently still alive. I'd suggest just starting the story at "The stars glimmered brightly above us..." and going from there. Overall not bad. 7/10