Talk:A Living Nightmare/@comment-24543305-20140311163715/@comment-26835140-20160116012512

Ok, you did GREAT for your first pasta! your hardships are already over! and you seem to have some people asking you for a sequel which is a great sign. there are some suggestions i have if youre interested, just write on my wall if you want to hear them. grammatical errors arent really a big problem. just some rephrasing and trying to find different, more adverse ways to say "scarred me for life" or "haunt my dreams forever" and maybe take more time for your character to percieve things, there were many oppurtunities to let the audience know the personality of your character that you didnt take. and im not saying all of this to be a critic, im sayng this to help. because you seem to be down on your spirits about your sequel and such. which is NONSENSE because of the amount of potential this story has. Good luck man.