Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24381191-20140904164608/@comment-25037895-20140906112657

[Pitiful; pathetic.] This is not a complete sentence. There is no need for a semi-colon either. This sentence needs to be added to something else. Perhaps add the word "people" to the end of this sentence, which can be used as a verb to describe the idea you're trying to convey.

In my opinion, the whole story was basically great in terms of description and composition, until the conclusion. I really think you could elaborate more on the end. It lacks the same level of description that's in the rest of the story.