Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140906061925/@comment-25226524-20140907205333

Well I'm not going to bother repeating pretty much everything Banning said, as I agree with most of it. The only thing I feel differently about is the need for justice or salvation, as neither of these often occur in real life, I feel that it's ok to leave these out from time to time. Having said that, I do agree with him that most people will expect these things, and that the majority of people have trouble with more realistic outcomes in stories or films due to the fact that these activities are often used as an escape/distraction from the harsh reality of life.

I like this story as it is, but if you alter it per Banning's suggestion, it will likely be more well-received. This is another good effort, as usual, and I'm sure people will enjoy reading it.