Talk:Bielina/@comment-24881871-20140709140349

I was browsing pastas in the Nature category when I found this. Although I initially planned to edit it without giving the story much thought, I was intrigued when I realized it was a regaling of a historical event I had taken interest in a few months prior. The destruction of the temple-fortress Svantovit at Cape Arkona was a significant event in European history, as it marked the beginning of the decline of the Wends, the transformation of Slavic to German culture in Rügen, and the Christianization of island. It is worth noting that Arkona itself is not an island, but a cape.

There were some grammatical mistakes, misspellings, and the like that were difficult to correct without taking away from the slow of the story. I did the best I could, removing unnecessary commas and ellipses that had no effect on the story. I advise comparing the revisions I made to the original story in order to see how much I changed.

The imagery used to describe Constantine's expedition, from the bodies strapped on the stake to his maniacal laughter at the sight of the Waldgrave being swallowed whole, was both vivid and graphic. It wasn't difficult to visualize the events that took place, to see what he saw. The descriptions used made a fantastical story seem like a very real and plausible account of a historical event. Needless to say, I really enjoyed reading this. 8.8/10