Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5542146-20181031081309/@comment-35911608-20181102141814

I don’t think I even got halfway through this one. The length is quite ridiculous for such little content, and I got no creep feelings at any point of the story - or rather, biography. The monsters addressed at the beginning seem to make random reoccurrences, and there’s no build up to the terror.

Yeah, I get it’s a descend into madness, but do we REALLY need to be Told every single thing that shaped Ian into who he is in excruciating detail? Nothing is Shown, this simply feels like a lecture on the life of a mentally ill and abused man. Even if the ending has some terrifying twist, the build up is not worth it at all. If there’s some personal experiences written in there, then I sympathize for you, but I don’t think this story holds up.