Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5239282-20140318010314/@comment-4832646-20140318181117

There's a few grammar errors here and there, and why did the ending repeat twice? I saw what you did, repeating the beginning as the end, but at the same time, you didn't need to repeat it twice. It's redundant, basically.

There's a bit of backwards phrasing here and there. But other than that, it's decent.