Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-7162179-20140820155205/@comment-24101790-20140820214115

Have to agree with Mystreve here, but I have a few things to mention for your next story/poem. I spotted some grammatical (it's=it is, its=possession), spelling issues ("ignorand"), and some punctuation issues.

Also if this is a poem, unless you are going for free verse, you should pick a more set rhyming scheme (ABAB, ABBA, etc.) than (-A-A) You could also break the poem into stanzas/segments to make the flow better.