Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20150511053919/@comment-26326346-20150512044253

Thanks for the feedback and suggestions! I fixed the two things you told me to, but I'm a bit unsure what you mean about elaborating.

Do you mean that I should elaborate more that the old man cooked the girl's dad and is serving him to her, why the old man has the girl and hasn't killed her, or something else? I've been thinking about elaborating on the second point, but am unsure if I should.

Anyway, I'm glad that you thought the storyline was alright. It's my least favorite Creepypasta that I've written so far. This was actually the first Creepypasta I wrote and I debated a lot on whether or not I'd post it on here, but decided to post it to see what sort of reception it would get.

Thanks again for the read and feedback :)