Talk:Sever/@comment-7673575-20180711182149

Okay, we have a Mexican called "Pretzel" a Russian called "North Winter" and a redshirt doctor named Ed. In a wendigo story. This should be good.

Use of silence - Silence is sever ely (te-he) underused is this story. While the story itself is good, and I know just how unnerving and eerie can The Winter SilenceTM be, the fact remains that silence kicks in too late and doesn't have much effect - 55 points

Originality - The story really shines here. While wendigo stories aren't really unheard of on this wiki, they are still pretty rare. Frankly, your description of a wendigo reminded me a lot of Rogue Titan from SnK, and that is something even more rare in wendigo stories - 100 points

Fear factor - Kinda divided here. While the factor was present, it wasn't distributed very well and only really came near the end when North was brough into hospital, and it turned out that he picked up some sort of monster sickness. What little of it there was, was okay - 73 points

Bonus points - In hopes that Zarina will notice me - adds 10 points

Malus points - Lords, Helel! Pull yourself together and be a bit more professional here! - removes 10 points

Final score: 223/300 (74.3/100)