Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24713525-20140321144843/@comment-24304936-20140321145914

Very cliche.

Can't sleep, something's there, someone dies. That's a tried and died formula.

I would aim for something more original. When writing, it is often best to stay away from ideas that have been beaten into the ground. Think outside of the box.

Anyway, your grammar and structure seem to be okay. It's just the content that does nothing for me.