Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26326346-20151001074315/@comment-27012445-20151005025845

This was well written, not too lengthy and an easy read.The one thing that took me out of the story was the dialogue. There was something artificial about it. It just didn't sound like how average people talk with each other. Some of the correlation also didn't make sense, like being thankful for wearing layers of clothes that prevents being blown over. I think of layers as protective against cold and wind not weighing down. The use of "spotting the blizzard" also doesn't seem to make sense. I would use "aware of the blizzard" or something along those lines.