User blog:Disco Circus/Little Talk

I've decided to start keeping track of some possible change ideas for a story I'm helping to edit. It's called Little Talk, and it's written by Tyberzannisultra. I've read it a couple times up and down and so far it's pretty good! It's up on my talk page if anybody else is interested but here is the place for the little things I might be adding.

This might be a bit long but let's start. These are just ideas, probably will come back and work on later-

"And now the woman, old and frail, was all alone. The stair groaned again under her soft step." + "The sound echoed through her mind, reminding her that she was all alone."

"'Soon this will'" + "'all'" "'be over,'" she sighed, "and buried with our past." + "She felt peace knowing that he was there."

"She felt desperate. She didn't understand, she felt like she needed to know more, but she couldn't remember why." + "Nothing made sense to her now." '"I don't know if I am wrong or right.'"

More edits to come.