Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5306249-20200120013923/@comment-5306249-20200122165613

BloodySpghetti wrote: That's a good one, really, it could work like a "classic" pasta if you get lazy and don't expand on the plot and lore in the future. I like that. Probably has to do with your casual tone and bunch of swearing and all that which made it really endearing as a piece.

As for the zombies, change up the "zombie virus" to "zombie infection" as a general thing. You can use the notion that it might've been a virus here and there but as per the aliens in the ending, it's less likely to be a virus. Infection sounds more consistent.

I like the idea of aliens but fuck that "dreamers" name is silly. Cuddlers was good, Dreamers don't like that one. Need to come up with something different I'd say. I'll try to think of something while I work lul.

Also, I'm getting the feeling that regular infected have the overall appearence of the earlier fictional zombies/WWZ type look. Do mention that, I guess thathey look mostly human. Maybe kinda emaciated, maybe something wrong with their eyes or stare and they like "brain dead" on a higher level. Kinda matters when you mention the succubus looking pretty normal as a contrast to the other special types. I think they highly decomposed zombie is kind of a waste since they shouldn't be able to move with only like half a body or something. I always thought it's weird a zombie could be sufficient enough to survive "long term" when his guts are blown off; it eats meat for energy, no digestion; no energy.

Also if you do intend the aliens to use some sort of bio-warfare stuff to zombify humans; a preferably healthy body would be a better host than a half dead husk that's barely fucntional. A whole body would be better than half a body.

Kinda want to see where you'll take this Thanks for the input, I had been planning to improve the detals about commons and dreamers, since those feel to be the driving point. Protagonist also says "Virus" loosely, as to humans it appears to be viral, when in reality its something more alien and transformative (kinda similar to the Marker effect from Dead Space [which Im now realizing this story is awfully similar to lmao]).