Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37810803-20181231231243/@comment-36627132-20190101035220

Spelling and Grammar Issues: First and foremost this story is just a gigantic wall of text and should be split into paragraphs, especially when a different character is speaking. Second, a lot of words are inappropriately capitalized while words that should be (such as I) are not. You often use a comma where a period is necessary. Since there is no periods at all in your story, it is a giant run-on sentance. In the place of quotation marks (") you have dashes (-).

Plot Issues: The whole thing is quickly summarised and lacking in detail. The story starts without any explaination at all and what was happening in the moments leading up to it is never expalined. There are a few inconsistencies: what is in the sewer for the main character to make a weapon out of besides human waste? Then the character gets "a big part of" his skin bit off and doesn't bleed to death and runs back home with nobody else in the neighborhood noticing him being chased. The monster sounds slow: the main character escapes to his house and is left with a bit of time before the monster breaks in and when he does the main character has enough time to board his room up. And how did he get his dad's shotgun? Was there one in his room? Then the story ends with a pointless confrontation that makes the monster seem like a total wimp.

With all this in mind, I wonder rather or not if this is a Trollpasta parody of bad Creepypastas.