Talk:The Things Around the Corner/@comment-24963841-20150323041011

In short this story needs a lot of work. The e-mail address should say TheModerator@aol.com, and don't mention him not usually opening e-mails from people he doesn't know, just that he opened it out of curiosity. Matt is one of the biggest weak points here, he just shows up out of the blue spouts exposition and gets killed by the creatures seconds later, its bad story telling. How ever the biggest flaw is the ending, it makes no sense, nobody would laugh when they are getting attacked by evil monsters. The concept isn't bad, the story just needs a lot of work. Final score 3/10