Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27838637-20160426151716/@comment-27838637-20160506131946

The story has been updated. I added a few new paragraphs and rewrote a few sentences. I think the new version has adressed most of the previous issues.

I'm still keen to hear some feedback from anyone and everyone. I don't mind if it's a positive review or a negative review, it all helps in the long run. I'd love to hear what people think about the plot itself, including the twists and the killer.

I'd also like to know what the next step in the development of this story is.

Thanks in advance for anyone who takes the time out of their day to read and review!

A_O.