Talk:Lord of Lies/@comment-26425680-20160208234943

Very enjoyable story. The lead-up to Kevin's murder is handled very well, and I wasn't really sure if Peter would go through with it until the moment that he actually did it. I found myself rooting for Peter to change his mind, but he didn't. As far as any shortcomings are concerned, the finale doesn't quite live up to the rest of the story. It was a little too abrupt for my tastes, maybe it could be expanded upon a bit. My last concern is admittedly a nitpick, but the characterization for Kevin is a little too one-dimensional. In my profession, I work very closely with children who have been abused, so perhaps I'm looking at this a little more critically than the average reader, but I think you missed a golden opportunity to give him a little more depth. If a child has suffered nine years of emotional neglect (to the point that his parents actually want him dead) there are going to be some scars running deep through his psyche. Instead of some complexity, we basically get a stock character whose personality doesn't mesh with his reality.