Talk:The Pass/@comment-6862307-20140118122950

This was good, but not great in my opinion. It does have good writing and as Crashing Cymbal points out has a level of professionalism about it. But I do have a few qualms with the story. Firstly, I can tell you based your story on the Dyatlov Pass incident. That's not necessarily a *bad* thing, the Dyatlov Pass Incident is a great mystery and a genuinely scary one too but I felt that in some ways you failed to add anything to it and the changes made did not make the story any creepier. I would have imagined this story attempting to be creepier than the real life event, which could be done well with the right fiction. But even so, I still got a few goosebumps and that is what I'm here for. I feel this could have been better at the end of the day, but it also could have been much, much worse. 6.9/10