Talk:Memoirs of a Cam-Girl - PART 2: This Rabbit Hole Is a Sarlacc Pit/@comment-24966092-20150606215250

Oh god, how could this one be worse than the first one. I expected an improvement, instead you just completely disregarded the whole cam-girl angle and turned "Guy With Bag on Head" into a Jigsaw-like villain who is unbelievably able to just predict the move of his opponent at every turn. Some of the lines in this one are truly cringe-worthy, such as:

"I am doom and my favourite food is girlfriends"

"TF2 scrims" (this one would be much more forgivable if this wasn't meant to be scary)

The subtitle: "This Rabbit Hole is a Sarlaac Pit" (if I were to do a commentary of some sort on this series, I think I'd call it "This Mediocre Creepypasta Series is a Goddamned Mess)

and the fact the SCARY VILLAIN tells the main character to "grow a pair".

I can see what you were going for in this series, but in this installment you've completely veered off course and crashed into a tree. I hope the next one finds itself.