Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25477067-20150302182845/@comment-25907694-20150303003918

When i read what this was going to be about, i have to say that it sounded interesting. Firstly, i thought that, if you are having trouble getting your thoughts across, i recommend spending some time reading and practice writing, daily.

Now, the story wasn't bad. It was somewhat rushed. I don't know how he didn't notice his wrinkly old hands before. I feel like there is potential though.

You said that the person is living another person's last day. I suppose you mean that the fate isn't already decided, meaning, how they will die can be affected  by this man trapped in the other man's body. I thought it was going to be more like, he is inside the man's thoughts, stuck, unwilling to be there, forced. He, would then, have to live this other person's death. I feel like that would be more dark, but it could also need development. These are the things i was thinking. It wasn't too bad. It could be done well, still.