Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27190570-20160112010253/@comment-27190570-20160112023810

Update: Tried posting the story, got deleted. Would REALLY like feedback! I grammar-checked it so we're good on that front. The formatting is correct. That means it's suffering from either word or story issues. I'm willing to fix either minor story issues or any sort of wording issues, but if the story issues are extensive, I probably won't fix it. Thank you for any and all feedback, this won't be a repeat of "The Day James Died" where I didn't listen to any advice.