Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25148755-20140718050027/@comment-24304936-20140718150554

I think you should expand on the genetic part. Perhaps elaborate on the methods of DNA extraction. Of course, over-the-top gore is pointless, but I think the extent of David's suffering would be cool to see, if not hinted at. I disagree with Sy about the ending. Very cringe-worthy. Obviously it leaves you with a nice "wtf" reaction since the baby would be a product of two people with the "golden DNA".

As far as a title, how about "Deoxyribonucleic Abduction"? :)