Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28731253-20160711154615/@comment-26537256-20160712055516

Basically, I feel this story is wholly too predictable and a little nonsensical. Why would students be allowed to control a school's network system? Why would he upload those files of the murder? It's implied as a confession, but why does he want to be caught?

Some really interesting stuff could be explored with a simple premise, but you don't go anywhere interesting other then slight gore and pointless reactions. The grammar needs to be improved slightly, and overall, this whole piece is just bland.

Actually incorporate the why into this story and it might make something worth viewing. In its current state, I wouldn't recommend posting this.