Talk:The Mangrove Mirror/@comment-28266772-20160803132008/@comment-28266772-20160804093710

You're clearly a talented writer and you create some great imagery, but it's hard to have your cake and eat it when it comes to fictionalized versions of real life events. Ultimately a story must be entertaining, while a real-life account only has to be accurate. By compromising between the two you risk failing at both of those tasks. In this case - did you really see a demonic version of yourself in a mirror? My main issue is that the story flow suffers as a result of the conclusion. Yes, in real life, stories do not possess discrete arcs with beginning, middles, and ends and it's simply unrealistic to impose those conditions on our accounts of true stories. But it doesn't change the fact that the ending fizzles after an, otherwise, interesting crescendo. Next time I would suggest letting your narrative be inspired by real life events, not bound by them. Other than that I think this is a tremendous effort and I sincerely encourage you to put more of your work up on the wikia because it'd be a shame to let good writing like this never see the light of day.

If you're curious, as a new member, a great way to get feedback from the community can be to use the writer's workshop to post a story as a WIP. People will generally offer in-depth reviews (which are hard to do in a comment section) that can be put into effect before you put your story up on the wikia. It's a great place to workshop your material and can be especially useful for stories where you are struggling to make your ideas work, or are concerned that something you've tried to do hasn't worked out. It's an extremely useful way to get your story read and reviewed, while also giving you the chance to engage with the community.

Also if you're interested you can put a story up on the writer's showcase to show off your finished stories. Obviously a big concern of any author who posts here is that their stories will not get read and this can help to give you a bit more exposure.