Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140820070051/@comment-24996913-20140822030433

Wow, I just noticed what you pointed out. As stated in the sentences before the story began, I was rushing while writing this so I must've forgotten the first name I had chosen for the wife. Victoria suits her much better, and I've corrected my error. Thanks for pointing that out. And, I like your advice but there really wasn't an affair taking place. The only reason she killed him was because he knew about their true identity. Therefore, she had to do it in order to remain ambiguous (probably the wrong word to describe it). I did at first feel I should've prolonged the beginning, sort of dragging out the paranoia Ronald felt with his wife and Damon, and I still may drag it out a bit just to deepen the readers plunge into the story, but with the next part, which will be much longer, I'm a bit worried I may give too much away.