Talk:The Light Bringer/@comment-4458203-20150113073856

7/10

I like this story in general, the vague and mysterious element of it was sucessful in creating a very creepy atmosphere. But in many stories, including one of mine, the "monster" in it falls flat and it doesn't feel as though his reveal adds to the story. Better off leaving him shrouded in darkness IMO.

Also, the big thing is that while this story has solid build up it left me expecting a much better ending. But still, good job.