Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25444551-20140920210844/@comment-25436006-20140921012405

You really like commas. The Style Guide for Writing can definitely help you. I like the idea of a first person zombie narrative. The ending about "knocking on your door tonight" felt like a cliche twist. I think the infection being a gift would make for the stronger ending as long as you can drive the point home. Overall it needs proofreading and some revision, but the essence is there. With some work I think you'll have a good story.