Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25623211-20141125133145/@comment-25764026-20141125175452

For the story to already be at this part it is not very good. You are on the right track though with that plot twist. For that beginning you should at least one or two more people to just add to it and have a little bit of a more horrifying death. Just don't reveal he is the monster or it will kind of make things less creepy and less surprising. Of course this is only my opinion and plus I am new to the website...I would hear from a few more people until you just took advice from me.