Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24957984-20140918233255/@comment-24957984-20140919003130

Jay ten wrote: Ha, that's pretty good. Very clever. There are some issues with some of the wording you would probably catch. I would say "leave work" instead of "get out of work" (that's just me). "Remember" instead of "realized" I think. "I'm used to go to" should probably be "I usually go to." The beginning of the second paragraph, I would say, "When I got there, I asked what the price of steak was." I think I would also just say, "The butcher replied,"

Those are the only issues I noticed, this is a nice little micro pasta in my opinion, dark and humorous. Good work. Well, I'll fix these issues, thanks :)