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(My first try at creepypastas or horror writing in general. Would love feedback) 10/27/2015--San Dos Police Station Transcript of a journal found near the Don Villareal forest, including notes from investigators. DO NOT ENTER THE FOREST! (Each letter written as though a pencil was pushed down harshly against the paper.) I am currently in a cave, cold, scared, and with a friend and a dead body. I found this empty notebook near the cave, I don't know where it came from, it seems normal. Oh god, it's coming. OK, it's leaving. But we all know it's coming back. So I'll make this as quickly as I can.

My name is Inigo Alcansia, an average 16 year old from San Dos. I was just at my best friend Dexter La Huzman's house, when he told me to go to what would be hell. "Dude, I always wondered - what's inside the nearby forest?" he asked. "Don Villareal?" I said, just making sure. "Yep," he said, "we should go check it out." "So we can get lost and murdered?" I replied. "Besides, it's closed off for a good reason." "Oh come on man, just a little walk at night and we're out." he went. "Fine, but we invite one more of our buds for good measure." I go. So we ended up going a few nights later because that's when we Filipinos get a 1 week break from school. We invited our friend from school, May Pagtawan, just because she was the only one of our friends available at the time, and she had nothing better to do anyway.

We then packed up, met up at Dex's house, and left. I led us to the gate of the fence surrounding the forest. Since no one has tried to go in since a car crashed into a tree back in 1981, the padlock was easy to break off.

We ventured into the forest, and after what seemed like 30 minutes (I forgot to get my watch repaired), we kept on running into familiar areas. We were lost.

"Nice one Dex, nice one. We are now going to fucking die!" I said in rage.

"Hey, why are you mad at me?" he whined. "It was your idea to explore this place." May said.

They kept on arguing and making a racket until I said, "Tahimik na kayo! (Will you two be quiet?!) We're gonna get caught!"

"How are we gonna get caught here-" May almost finished. She was cut off. We all heard a twig snap behind us and turned to that direction.

A lady, estimated age 50+, was behind us. "Ano'ng ginagawa niyo dito? (What are you doing here?)" she asked.

"Pasensiya po ma'am, naglalakad lang po kami dito. (Sorry ma'am, we were just walking here)" May said. Thank God she knew Filipino better than me or Dex.

"Teka, ano'ng ginagawa mo dito? (Wait, what are you doing here?)" I went. At last my tongue didn't fail at speaking the language.

"I keep watch over the area at night." she said. We all jumped because all of a sudden she speaks English. "Besides, it is dangerous to be out here. Go home, all of you."

"But, we're lo-" Dex was going to say, but he stopped because she stared menacingly, so impossibly powerful, as though she looking into our souls. We went off to the left, then hid and waited for her to leave. After that, we kept on going.

We should have stayed there and see what she would do. She could've been helpful instead of the hell we are in right now.

We kept going, and before we knew it, 'twas sunrise. We found a small clearing that was comfy enough for us and was well hidden from the entrance. We then slept until sunset.

We should've known it wasn't nature made.

We woke up because May was screaming, tangled up in a trap that looked like a madman designed it. A weird creature was all over the trap, and I saw it sticking something into her mouth. When is saw us, it flew away.

When she was free, she was badly wounded. I carried her on my back and we ran off to a new area we haven't seen. We found a river and a cave and set her down in the river to, at least, partially cure her wounds. We then went into the cave and talked a little. Dex then told a joke about The Beatle's Revolution 9. "I feel a bit better." May said and laughed. We then decided to let her go to sleep while me and Dex slept in shifts.

Then we were startled by crying.

We turned around and saw May screaming and weeping at the wall. Whatever that, that "thing" did to her, it made her go mad.

We went over to her and asked her stuff. Her cheeks were bleeding because she was clawing at them. She was sobbing very profoundly.

"What the fuck happened?!" I said.

"In my dream- there- there was a man- and- and the creature- it was raping me!" May went.

"OK, OK, calm down, breathe in and out." Dex was saying.

"No!" May shouted, "I can't! Whenever I close my eyes I just see him!"

Then something happened to her. Her face went lifeless. She then began croaking at us. She got up. We got up. She screamed. We ran.

We kept on going out, not too far from our cave, until she tripped over and fell head-first. We heard a crack.

"Is- is she dead?" Dex asked.

I checked her pulse, then nodded at Dex. We both teared up. After a few minutes we headed back to the cave, carrying her corpse in a blanket Dex brought. (I don't know why he brought it, but, it ended up being useful.)

After a while, we heard that fucking buzzing again. We looked outside, and saw it. It was greenish-grayish, and had six wings. It looked back, and we put our faces back into the cave. Then Dex spotted something near the innermost part of the cave. He looked, and froze. When I looked, I also froze.

It was there, and it looked fucking disgusting.

It was actually gray, but it had a green slimelike substance coating his body. It didn't drip off, either. It stuck. His eyes were unfourtunately similar to that of the 50 year old lady. It had a fly-like proboscis, which was what it put inside May. The arms and legs were fleshy, and the grossest part is, it was a hermaphrodite. It's male genitalia was stuck inside it's female genitalia. (The page has a stain in the lower right corner. Lab tests say it's vomit.)

We then ran out, and kept doing so until it was evident it left. When we returned, it came back too, and chased us again. He did this 5 more times or so.

Oh, no. I hear it. This may be the last piece of contact I may have with the ouside, so, please, do not ent

(The rest of the page was torn off, with a line from the pencil trailing off of the last word.)

''Investigators are currently trying to see what happened. Until then, the San Dos Police Department declare Inigo Alcansia and Dexter La Huzman missing, and May Pagtawan dead with corpse missing.'' 