Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25362675-20150124170646

I found this wiki a while ago and read a few pastas, all of which were amazing imo, so I thought I should give creepypasta writing a go. So far, I wrote a prologue to a 2-3 chapter pasta (excluding the prologue). I was wondering if this beginning is chilling enough to give goosebumps, or if something needs to be improved. All comments welcomed, unless they're hateful and/or spam.

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Imagine you are walking through a secluded section of nature at night. Feel the cold air grazing through your hair as you take a slow, but meaningful, walk. Now imagine that you are thinking something is following you. You can't see anything behind you, except for the light fog that has now started to appear around you. A growl can be heard slightly, but it sounds like it is growling into your ear. Your arms go weak, as do your legs. You feel so dizzy, you have to stop walking and close your eyes to stop yourself from fainting... Suddenly, the growling-like sound stops. You open your eyes again after having them closed since your arms and legs go weak. Nothing can be seen, not even the fog. You realize you are on the floor, covered in a dark, thick liquid. It's not long until you realize it's blood. You search for a wound on yourself, but no wound exists on your skin. Where did the blood come from, and what was that growling you heard? Standing up, you turn around and see a figure. It looks like a werewolf/vampire hybrid from what you can see, but it is actually your worst nightmare...

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