Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20180118231753/@comment-32764586-20180119151843

JohnathanNash wrote: I disagree with your assessment of why a micropasta wouldn't do well on this site. I have about three or four that have done rather well on this site. all of which are under seven-hundred words, and one is perhaps my favorite thing that I've published here. Now, while this story is short, it is also about the same lenght as Mother's Call, which is perhaps the best micropasta I've ever read.

That being said, I also agree that this story isn't ready to be published. It needs something more. A suggestion that may ramp up the creepy factor would be to have him reach into the couch, but instead of feeling all the dust and lint and stuff, have him not be able to feel anything. Maybe just a little dirt when his hand gets past the cushions, then fall into a void where the hand can grab him. Have it so that he is elbow to shoulder deep in the couch before the hand grabs him. It would give a real WTF feeling to the story, and make it scarier. I was confident enough to post the story already, I'll close this thread in a bit. Thanks for the suggestion but that being said, I'm not sure if it'd add anything to the story.