Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9073039-20140604074913/@comment-9967354-20140604130227

This was pretty good in the beginning. I like the way your character expresses himself and, well, a bunch of things about the story. An hour and half a pack of cigarettes late. That kind of thing.

The ending, however, wasn't the best. He's frustrated, yeah, and he's angry. So he kills her? Bit extreme, don't you think? The gore wasn't pulled off very well, but it normally never is. Lesser details, please? It could just be me, though. I hate gore. And stories where a character just flips out. It reminds me of Jeff the Killer and the pink pony from cupcakes.