Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24037587-20140908115601/@comment-24304936-20140908123718

I'm leaning toward a "no" on this. I'm assuming this story takes place in a country where arranged marriages aren't common? Or are they? You should clarify that off the bat, which you do not. That began the bad taste in my mouth with the story from the beginning. Why was her father so hell-bent on introducing this guy? Who the hell was this guy? By the end, I really didn't care who lived and who died because you never really gave me a chance to.

The end was just blood, blood, blah blah. Sorry, it just was.

Final summary: You need more backstory, character build-up, and a better plot (i.e. less cliche). I can tell you have the passion to write (mechanically, your story only had a few very minor errors), but you need to work on the story element.