Talk:Tobit: Blood and Obligations/@comment-25024572-20150226172923

This is really damned good, and I especially love the cult angle. I don't know why, I just like the idea of evil cults worshipping a dark diety. Now, while this is really damned good, there are a few spelling/grammar errors here or there, like:

"The woman was terrified of course, as I image most of us would be." Also, you used the wrong waist at one point, and when having a character addressing another one, use a comma in front of the name (like, "Hello, Sam, how are you"). Just minor things though.

Also, when you said "Red Star", I immediately thought BIONICLE. Also, HAIL HYDRA!

But yeah, great work, man. I can't wait for the next chapter.