Talk:Olum

pretty cool story, I especially liked the gory imagery of "Olum", and the interesting perot raid setting. One thing I'd suggest changing is the word "terrorists" in the closing note ("With both terrorists and Western soldiers ascending these mountains to battle"), you don't wanna make creepypastas political, and "terrorist" is a very POV term. I'd suggest changing it to something like "Afghan soldiers", or just "With soldiers ascending these mountains to battle" leaving out the "western" and "terrorist" stuff. Remember "one man's 'terrorist' is another man's 'freedom fighter'". Otherwise, great story, hope to see more from you :) Atropina 23:46, June 13, 2012 (UTC)