Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20170819212316/@comment-4849011-20170824193511

Mmpratt99 deviantart wrote: Thank you so much for taking the time to spot further editing issues. Man, I should watch Drew Carey especially that underwear episode you mentioned. I'm so busy with other stuff that I miss the good shows.

Do you think I should change it so she's trapped inside the haunted house and not her house? Because that would make more sense with her mentally chewing out the other members of the exploring party.

You're certainly welcome. :-) The older (pre-2000s) sitcoms are the best because a lot of them actually remembered to be funny and have good writing. Luckily there are channels that rerun them.  I recently watched an episode of Night Court while waiting for my pizza in a restaurant, so that was good.  I don't know what that episode of The Drew Carey Show was called, but it was the one in which everyone but Drew and Mimi got invitations to a party.

I agree that it would make more sense. You'd just need to change the opening a little (like saying, "At least the others had ceased those pitiful mewling noises," or something to that effect).

ChristianWallis wrote: I've been meaning to do another blog and that might work. If I was going to do it though I'd do it on sentence structure as a whole which I need to read up more on.

That makes sense. Happy bank holiday!