Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25239238-20140729084928/@comment-25148755-20140731040717

Seems disjointed. The overall concept is ok...kind of reminds me of the classic Fantastic Four story with the Silver Surfer heralding the coming of Galactus to earth. There's some inconsistencies and there are rather large portions of events missing. On the one hand this adds to the "realism" since an actual found journal might be in pieces, but because we know it's not actually real it only lends it to more of a "wtf did I just read" sort of feeling. Keep building on it and refining it and you might have something worthwhile.