Talk:The Cropping of Life/@comment-26835140-20161105045424

Ahh man, you totally wrote a good pasta. DUDE you had an excellent writing style that was calm and explained scary things in great detail which made the experience better as if we were ACTUALLY hearing about this story which is refreshing as everyone goes for the 'first person jump scare' idea which never really works out. I hate to say it, but you kind of lost me once you cut to the aliens, and that may just be personal preference [The subject of aliens really bores me in general]. and the 'bear' or 'Uventral' was introduced well but, I can't say I was ever frightened by it. And even though you brought up a subject that I personally don't like you still managed to captivate me and make me appreciate the writing style. Most impressive indeed!

Anyways, great job. I will now go through my 'grading' process.

for your english I rate a 11/10 [very well used, developed dialogue and an excellent writing style made your story one to remember.], for your creepiness I rate a 3/10 [Sure, the idea of aliens potentially picking you is 'spooky' and the scream in the distance was a good setup that honestly could've been utilized better but that doesn't take this story very far.], for your characters I will rate 6/10 [you had realistic dialogue from your characters and that definitely made me connect with them better. I will say though, in this particular pasta the small character development is a part of the story so don't think about this part of the rating very much], and as an overall rating I give you 9/10, [which is quite rare from my ratings I will say]. But hey, great job. And I'm excited to see your future creations should you produce them.