Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28060931-20161219211715/@comment-31532017-20161223040224

Well that certainly explains the unusual poking I kept getting. I'm afraid you're gonna have to get second thoughts about it, since I already know how the story is about to go even with the changes. Regardless, I spot some issues I think you need to change.

- My mother sat staring at the (Christmas) tree, she looked shell-shocked. (Capitalization Error)

- (When) it saw me the monster screeched and fled. (Spelling Error)

- (That's) when I saw the fire axe in her hand. (Grammatical Error)

- At his feet (laid) John's body; a pulpy mess of brain tissue seeping out of the gory gash in his head. (Tense Swap)

- A sepulchral voice (murmured). (Spelling Error)

- Oh ho-ho, this (motherfucking) monster is going to (get) it, I thought. (Spelling Errors)

- (The three) of us sat around a fir table, pumpernickel bites neatly laid out over it; the fire crackled gingerly in the marble fireplace. (Flows a lot better in my mind)