Talk:The Bus Ritual/@comment-35711173-20190518022112

Hi,

You're fighting against the fact that ritual went out of fashion with the iPhone 6. Any ritual pastas now must really be exceptional and unique to be well received now days. This isn't.

It's pretty obvious that you are not a native English speaker. You have about a dozen errors flagged by http://www.grammarly.com in the free mode. Unfortunately, Grammarly doesn't pick up errors that will really slow down the reader.

I suggest that you go to the Writer's Workshop in the forum. You can get help there.