Talk:Unwanted Gifts/@comment-25052433-20140816183638/@comment-25220801-20140816191955

Thanks for the review. :)

You're right about the 'wordy' part. This was deliberate in an attempt to give an impression of the type of person he was i.e. a well educated graduate. Again, you're right, probably doesn't work for a creepypasta, but I wanted to try it. ;)

Plus there is more boring detail in the 'early days' i.e. the mouse burial, when the world is still reasonably ticking over as normal for him.

The vomiting...well, that's how I think I'd react. I'm a coward at heart. ;)

Many thanks for the useful critique though - always welcome!