Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20190529070124/@comment-35911608-20190529163707

It's certainly a strange tale, and an interesting way of polishing the surface of a rink.

I just couldn't get a grasp on the whole deal with Austin's mom abandoning him at different places, or rather, why it was there. It was well written and my heart went out for the kid, but I don't see how it plays into the scary ice rink. Maybe I'm missing something? I'm assuming it's the fear that something terrible could've happened to him because his mom just leaves him in places, but like I said already, I just feel bad for him rather than scared with him.

I guess I felt more despair than fear, I dunno. If that was the goal then very well done. If it was more for fear, then it's alright, but I'm not really sure myself how to improve or change it.