Talk:Akarui Mirai/@comment-38965498-20190329201629

I liked this story but I feel it would have been better in first person. I had to re-read some of it to really get into the story. If you write it in first person it allows you to really connect with your main character and makes for an even better story. It is a little odd written this way because we never know who the narrator is. It feels like it should be someone who knew him or something like that. 6/10