Talk:The Hole in the Wall/@comment-5733573-20181021142407

This story is unfortunately really sloppy and uneventful. The verb tense shifts constantly, and then there's the "It's weird....  It was weird....  Then it got weird." The plot leaves a lot to be desired. The build-up takes forever and the "scare" barely makes an impact. Unfortunately, the story's just not very strong.