Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25519076-20141012224518/@comment-25546552-20141016204239

Like people above have said I must say that you should not give this up. To me this seems like it is going to be one of the longer creepypastas and I generally like those. To me that is why it has not gone anywhere yet.

Because it needs a proper intro, I would almost say a good story needs to make you care for the protagonist, but maybe i'm in the wrong genre of literature? I would like to note, that I think your off to a good start with this.

But if it is going to be longer you have to be careful. A ood long creepypasta can be really good or cause some people to fall asleep midway or at the begining. Although i'm inclined to see these things through to the end.

And I saw the broken up verison that Jay posted, it looks much better but it seems most of the paragraphs start with "Steven" possibly look into having more diverse transitions of a rewrite or extension of this piece.

I'm rather new to this site and I find myself googling all these words to make sure i'm not spelling them wrong and looking like an idiot. I need my spell-check anyone feel my pain?