Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25196212-20140723003632/@comment-25148755-20140723020740

Sante, I'm not sure why you are getting angry about us saying this story will get deleted, when the reality is that it is a slightly different version of your Roblox story that was already deleted by Emptyrealinvective. http://pastebin.com/LiGcLNXk

Other than removing the direct Roblox reference, you haven't fixed any of the grammatical errors, cliches, or other problems he found with it. If you want/need some help trying to do that, let me know.