Talk:Jack and Jill/@comment-28329854-20160721172618

Even though the pacing was quite poor, it was kind of interesting. I thought it was an overall solid creepypasta, albeit not great. It held my attention enough to not make me want it to end as soon as possible, which is more than I can say for other creepypastas. The only line that I thought was out of place and immersion breaking was "The door was locked. It wouldn't open either. " Overall, decent. I give it a 5.8/10