Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25036236-20150119173246/@comment-25036236-20150121010454

Ok, I wrote a new version. I am posting in in the writer's workshop. Here's what I changed:

- Scare factor. It's now unpredictability than gore. Though, there's only one true gore factor in the whole pasta.

- The MC has more character

- Outcome varies when the box opens.

- Everything else you'll have to read in the pasta.