Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26097514-20150210225459/@comment-26007602-20150211025201

Alright, so you'll have to fix the font color and line spacing. You also need to capitalize the start of each sentence: "Don't look behind you," and "Now they have..."

Now, this pasta is waaaaay too short. You're going to have to write more than sixteen sentences (most of these are fragments too, which are not grammatically correct and ruin the flow of the story). If you want to write a micropasta, then it needs to pack a significant punch to make up for its lack of content.

Alas, this story also makes little sense. The title is radiation, but who is speaking? Literal radiation as a metaphorical monster or a real monster? You neeeed more details in this story. I can't even comment on the plot because there is none.

Sadly, the final line of this is highly cliche. The "don't look behind you" trope has been used far too many times to be scary. It also doesn't make sense in this story; why is this monster behind me? There's been no indication that he's hostile or that he attacks humans.

All in all, you really need to expand on this for it to be worthwhile.