Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190702085504/@comment-36393004-20190702221405

I like the story. Not a big fan of the word choices within your dialogue between the rusalka and the soldier. The phrasing seems off for the time period you're going for. It could just be me though. In my head I am imaginging the two voices back and forth and something about it sounds wrong. I wish I could pin-point what exactly it is though.