Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27031855-20151005141642/@comment-25547916-20151007004707

I kind of like this, most forum-style pastas tend to fall flat, but this managed to be pretty interesting. The characters were fairly well built and felt fairly realistic. My biggest concern with this would probably be how forthcoming OhDatDawgofMine is. She launches into a super detailed retelling of her horrific nightmare like it's nothing. It seems like she should be more hesitant to share this or maybe shares in multiple posts with some of the other users commenting inbetween. She also doesn't seemed concerned enough about her boyfriend at the start, considering he isn't eating or drinking and is acting paranoid. This should maybe be drawn out more gradually. Lastly, I think some people might find the ending anti-climatic. I personally thought it was fine, but I just feel like others might have a problem with it. All in all, I thought this story was pretty good.