Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-7424710-20150214062513/@comment-5321651-20150214091301

This needs A LOT of work before being close to acceptable by the Quality Standards.

Firstly: ALL punctuation MUST have a space after them.

Hi there, this is my story. It is about a child and his large, creepy teddy bear. - Correct

Hi there,this is my story.It is about a child and his large,creepy teddy bear. - Incorrect

Secondly: Dialogue needs to be on two different lines.

"No. Don't do it." Warned Fred.

"I have to," replied James, "It's my duty."

- Correct

"No. Don't do it." Warned Fred. "I have to," replied James, "It's my duty." - Incorrect.

I haven't actually read the story, I don't have enough time. Someone will eventually give you some critique.