Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25825682-20150513020103/@comment-25825682-20150513042813

I'll first say thank you for the review. As far as the grammar corrections, I do appreciate what you have pointed out. I'll admit I didn't put the flashback in italic because I thought I was using it too much.

Now the reason the first part doesn't seem scary is because the conditions weren't met yet, for it to start in that part. I have considered foreshadowing the threat nearing the end of that section, I just wasn't sure yet.

Anyway, I'll work on fixing the plot and grammar issues when I get the time. Thanks again for this feedback.