Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25196212-20140723003632/@comment-24957984-20140723004803

This pasta has quite a lot of basic problems, not just in grammar aspects, but also in the plot etc.

But let's begin with the grammar. There are many misspelled words in the entire story. A simple spellchecking and some proffreading would help (Remember, Word is your friend). Also, there's no need to put text in bold or in all caps. This makes the story pathetic to read and gives no scary factor.

Unfortunately, there are also other reasons why your pasta will probably never be accepted here.

The plot is cliché and ridiculous. By just looking at the 666 thing, I already knew this story wasn't going to be good. Also, why would you bother with someone who pretty much spams death messages? This is like believing on Facebook comments where someone explains a random ritual. The story is not just poorly made, but highly unbelevable.

Overall, this is an awful creepypasta. Please, think of something else to write next time. But don't worry, if you think about an original plot and write it well, I'm sure some day you'll make a good pasta.