Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-5542146-20181029055238/@comment-9041013-20181029124127

Well, this is rather confusing and somewhat anticlimactic, on top of being kind of random. You just threw around bits and pieces of information it seems. Kinda kills the whole thing. And again, as Bob mentioned, your paragraphs are way off, made it a hell to read the thing.

Do fix those first.