Talk:Chatroom 98/@comment-8675674-20130901220508

This could have been really good but there are a lot of things that make it unrealistic.

It's completely unbelievable that a doctor would let anyone use his/her laptop.

Also, it says the character was admitted to the hospital right after his blackout from the computer, but then you say he hasn't slept for weeks. That's a little confusing.

A lot of stuff just happened without telling us why it would be scary to the character.

Like I said, the idea was great, it just needs a little more development.