Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37138398-20190226125235/@comment-9041013-20190226233631

Well you could have a whole decent story here, but this is like the summery. You mention universes and dimensions and empires and all those huge things that can fill full books but you don't really flash anything out.

You need to expand on this thing and make the "Thing" be of some actual segnificance.

Perhaps, being the thing that disapproves of kings or something like that that has been dormant for many many years until a new king rose and the "Thing" budged, noticable only to a guard or someone not exactly important who tries to warn the king to a no avail until the "Thing" slaughters people related to the king or the king himself.