Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20141227231837/@comment-4893169-20141228185055

Thank you for your heavy critiquing of this work, and you're quite right about it being my first Pasta, because this was the very story I've ever written before I have ever heard of Creepypasta. In fact, this was done when I was in middle school and was just been bitten by the writer's bug. It's based on an actual trip to Writer's Camp which ended up in a camp anthology of amateur stories (unfortunately my magazine copy got shoved into storage somewhere where it probably got leaked on and eaten by rats).

I'm using the original hand-written draft as an outline for a more refined version and aside from fixing the numerous mistakes that you listed, I'll probably have to move the timeline to the late 90's because a lot of people are more familiar with that decade than the 80's.

I'll probably won't make the Chilling Tales for Dark Nights Writing Contest in time, but at least it won't be a complete load of crap.