Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25477067-20141203160242/@comment-25428589-20141203161700

I quite like this, especially the ending.

There are a couple of small punctuation errors. When you say, "How dare that...that...thing do this to him! How dare it just take his life without a thought!" you need a question mark at the end of both sentences. I see at least one occasion where there is no space after a comma, and one where there is no comma before speech.

There aren't any real problems that I can see with the writing itself, other than a question about how you mistook eyes for headlights. The creature must either have been huge or extremely close to you for you to mistake its eyes for headlights. I like the pace of the story and the character's actions are believable.

86/100