Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26364137-20160515084117/@comment-26364137-20160516211014

Thank you so much for reading my story. After reading your comment and looking over my text again, I agree with your remarks, as I too found some of my sentences a bit difficult to read. I think I may have over complicated the language a bit, so I will try to take it down a notch. Thank you for your constructive feedback, I really appreciate it!