Talk:The Pet/@comment-26030957-20150225232318

This was great. I loved it. I actually like it so much that I think maybe you should consider re-writing the entire thing with more details of the ship and the family. Like, I don't know, maybe a scene of them eating diner? With some dialogue that shows their dysfunctionality? And maybe work on the ending a bit? I like the last line, I think it's a keeper, just the build up to it. And maybe work on the transition between the POV of the boy to the pet. This is some creepy good stuff, the first six paragraphs in particular were excellent, I think it maybe deserves a little more work.