Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27827923-20160219232035/@comment-25037895-20160228070903

There's punctuation issues (CTRL+F to search the page for text): "eyes ripped out nose torn and the ears were gone.", "We had done the normal celebration stay up until midnight party and wait '(no need for the apostrophe)till the ball dropped in New York.", "It had 4 (four) toes one looked misshapen.", " All I could find was a inscription saying "he p dy g(.)" most Most of it was marked off. "

Spacing and capitalization: "He had a long scratchy beard.(space)" what (What) the fuck happened to you kid?" "

A new speaker should not be in the same paragraph as the last speaker: " " please (Please) just help me to the hospital." " should be in a new paragraph.

There's other punctuation issues, the story needs a good proof-read. The ending is a bit-anti-climactic, it may be better to end the story with something else, "cloths" should be spelled "clothes". This sentence is confusing to me: "I looked at the rock next to me for cancellation to find anything about this hell-ish beings." (not sure what looking for cancellation means). The story comes off a bit ramped-up, although there was suspense for me. It kind off reads like getting scooped up and ripped to shreds. Maybe express how the character is feeling more to make the story less trite, and maybe express less of the setting, as these would be minor details in a fight for survival.