User talk:ChristianWallis

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SoPretentious (talk) 15:23, April 21, 2016 (UTC)

Nice!
Hey there, I couldn't help but notice that the good Anarchic Operations nominated Give It Everything for the July POTM. That's undeniably awesome, but not really surprising (considering how good of a pasta it is), so I just wanted to say congratulations. I'll be crossing my fingers for you in July!

Dr. Frank N. Furter ( talk ) 16:45, May 18, 2016 (UTC)

I saw them and applied a bunch. Again, I really appreciate the help. There were a couple things that I think I may keep though.

Referring to the demon with a capital 'H' was intentional after the first act of mutilation to rely that the protagonist believed that there was some kind of terrifying divinity behind the thing. It was just a little subtle thing from when the story felt more Lovecraftian.

Also, referring very vaguely to the rest of the country is a fairly common thing here in California. It's a big country so to a lot of people over here, there's California, the East Coast and varrying shades of stuff in the middle. It is kind of a forced inside joke that seems ludicrous to anybody not from here specifically (I'm not even sure if this is a thing elsewhere in America tbh), so I might consider changing it nontheless. Listing the 4th as a numeral also has a bit of the same connotation, where everybody I know would write the holiday as "The 4th of July", but that one I did change.

For the speaking rule though, most of those isntances of dialogue were the first time somebody had spoken in the paragraph. There was physical narration and some reaction, but there wasn't exactly an internal monologue to contend with the dialogue. Do you think it would still be necessary to break a new line?

Thanks again

GodlyBob (talk) 02:01, June 18, 2016 (UTC)

GodlyBob

Re: Review
I usually have a lot of time on my hands, and I am always happy to review a story. Unfortunately, you have caught me in a bad time as I have been insanely busy over the past few days. I have read your story, but due to time constraints I am having in real life, I am doubtful that I can provide a good enough review for you. Anything I was to write would be rushed and I would probably omit alot of valuable comments. I would suggest asking EmpyrealInvective to review the story, or Dr. Frank N Furter, as they seem to be incredibly active on the writers workshop.

Once again, I am incredibly sorry that I can't review your story at this time. In a few days, when I have some time on my hands, I would be happy to review it. I just think your best option for immediate feedback would be to ask somebody else for now.

Anarchic Operations (talk) 03:04, June 28, 2016 (UTC)