Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20150618163125/@comment-9041013-20150618212654

Christopher Michael Richardson wrote: Multiple grammar issues, but overall I liked the plot. the grammar issues I caught were the following.

First sentence is a run on and is weird to read.

everyone stare at me should be stared at me.

You've is not right there.

If I may so myself. So should be say Well I fixed that :)