Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29969337-20161130180803/@comment-24101790-20161201004612

Derpyspaghetti wrote: That does sound a bit better than an eight year old hanging himself, yes, because kids at that age generally don't see the world through the lense of logic that you and I do. (For example, there could be an alligator in my closet just because I can't see into my closet.) Also, I thought of the skerry as an imp, not a tree. Just thought that was weird.

Uh Derpy, there is an alligator in your closet.

As for Mister, I would suggest maybe breaking it into entries (the school assignment would help give it more of a frame/reason for being) would help a bit so it doesn't feel like they're writing this all at once, and maybe include other minutia (hobbies, activities, friends, etc.) in the entries so it doesn't feel like it's all focused on one event and creates a more realistic diary/journal format. Best of luck to you in your writing (remember to update this page or post a revised version in the comments below (as per the forum rules).