Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24841732-20140425152259/@comment-24929924-20140513233245

Ecuinach wrote: MOXCRunner1 wrote: Reeeaaaally fast, I wanted to bring up a small point- when you have the guy look at his smartphone and realize he's late, I'd recommend trying to find a way to denote it as dialogue or thought. Maybe italicized dialogue, or some such thing. As it is, even though it's pretty clear what the intent is, the jump of perspective/flow is a bit awkward.

I'm in a bit of a hurry atm, but I'll come back later and do a bit more of a review and hopefully be able to offer some helpful suggestions:) I thought that WAS italicized. Must of got screwed up when I uploaded it. I'll update this later, as this is an old version anyway.

Oooookay, gotcha. I was a bit confused:P It's kinda weird though, I guess copying into the post thing strips stuff like that from the passage, in hindsight I remember that happening to me once as well.