Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32764586-20171230143744/@comment-26399604-20180102131910

Awesome, nice job with the updates. My only nit-pick is for the July 25th entry. What makes the mosquito so deathly is its ability to land softly and undetected. I don't think they could make a bang noise even if they tried; I could be wrong and you are showing a different side to them in this story -- again nit-pick as I stated above.

Last thoughts: I realized there was one small thing I couldn't previously figure out earlier until after a second read: why did the protagonist start this journal? I feel the reader can determine that later on when events really escalate, but what initially prompted it? Did they start it as a coping method when they first noticed everything or were they already writing other entries and the recent events changed their interest?

I think a small piece in the beginning would help shed some light on this and add a realistic purpose to the entire story.