Talk:The Last Job/@comment-26193563-20150424011839

I guess I'll start at the very beginning.

Title: "The Last Job" has a sinister, foreboding ring around it. I think it's a good choice for the matter, building up suspension already. This starts getting readers interested.

The pasta begins with a little intro of how the so-called character "Jeff" (a really common name) takes his job with little doubt. I'm not sure if the intro was entirely neccessary. Maybe it could be simplified a bit, I don't know, but for now it's alright.

Then we delve deep into the pasta. He obviously must accept the job, as the temptation of money lures him, and there's really no use arguing that. However, who delivered the letter? It isn't mentioned in the story, and neither was the purpose.

The content in the bin (that is, the corpse) was predictable but not cliche. You might've expected a demon-summoning ritual items or a bloody razor, but a dead body will do.

And, of course, Jeff's curiosity, which pretty much kills him at the end. I have to mention that I groaned when he decided to peek in the bin and stay in the room after midnight. "Curiosity kills the rat," as it was certainly in this case. If he had kept his business to himself, he could have lived a long time. This is the most used Creepypasta cliche, and perhaps the most important. The curiosity drives the story forward, and also topples it, because it's just so overused. I wish there was another way it could have been played out, but there was pretty much no other option.

The ending was brilliant. I had no idea what was going on (I thought he would be stalked by the Demon or something) until the door closed. Incredibly creepy, a half twist, and a great way to end a pasta. The fate of Jeff is vague enough for the reader to imagine.

I wasn't so sure what the little hauntings in his apartment room were for. I'll assume that this is how the malevolent beings that brought him the recycling bin track him, and I guess the strays were like spies, tracking him too. I'm just assuming, because the story makes that concept sort of blurry.

Overall? I enjoyed it. If this was your first pasta... . The plot was original, and the topic I gave you, "Recycling Bins," was well-played out in this pasta. There were some spelling and grammar errors scattered across the story, and I'll try to fix that. But really, it was a good read.

7.5/10