Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20150126235031/@comment-25226524-20150127013441

Well that caught me off guard, even though I was looking for one of your twists. It's beautifully written, and I didn't really see any errors. You definitely did a good job of throwing a curve-ball. There's a good dose of emotion in this for such a short story, and I think plenty of people will enjoy it. There may need to be just a little more clarity at the end in reference to the specific situation he's expiring in, but as always, that may just be me. I'm glad to see something new of yours and hope to see more in the future.