Talk:Missing/@comment-25052433-20140829005122

Ok now, let's take a trip down to the spin zone...(as in, spin-off) zone, and give this one a review.

What went right:

-I can tell this pasta is a few months old, so maybe it pre-dates the blacklist on Slender products. If so, forgive me for marking it for review.

-So, it's a spin off, granted. Normally, I would take a nice little 'delete now' on there and let the admins do that voodoo that they do so well. However, I would actually go to bat for this story to stay up. Spin off or not, this is probably the best Slender product since the first Slender story.

-Had I never heard of the faceless man that dresses like he's going on a job interview, I would have considered this to be an amazing product just on its own merit. It was well told, deep and added new dimensions to existing characters. It was well done in all regards.

So, what went as wrong as a faceless creep that steals kids:

-My biggest complaint here is the fact that you used Slenderman. Why? You clearly have the creativity and writing capacity. You could have written an original pasta here with your own bad guy in the woods, and this one would have been a homerun. That really is my biggest gripe here. You could potentially sell this one on Spinpasta, but really, I think this could be a great Creepypasta, if it just didn't feature an antagonist that has been so bastardized by the fan community that he isn't even close to scary anymore.

In closing, I would suggest you rework this, without the Slenderman in it. Think of something that YOU conceived, and use this similar plot, and you will have a great story on your hands. Otherwise, this just falls into the void of yet another spin-off, though a very well written one.