Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20190201061914/@comment-28428152-20190205010315

I like how it's meant to read like a blog post, and from a technical standpoint its well written save for a few spots here and there. The biggest issue I have, though, is that there's way too many interuptions in the narrative that explain the show and background. I'd suggest finding a way to have the background info thrown in as-needed, and in such a way that it doesn't interupt the flow of the story. Also, the climax wasn't really all that it was building up to be, nothing really happened except some dude hit a kid and implied cannibalism.