Talk:Tiara/@comment-28428152-20180304101851

Okay, read over it. Interesting concept, but there are some plot holes that need to be addressed. For one, the police would never call a paranormal investigator. Also, it is a bit of a stretch to say that a small group of scientists in World War II somehow, without catching the eye of the American government, made technology over a century beyond the highest technological capabilities of the time, as that technology, the computer power in particular, would have been immediately found and used by the government, and in turn would have completely changed history as we know it. If you still want to add a science-fiction element to it, then I'd checl out this clip from a Russian experiment in 1940 where they kept a disembodied dog head alive, and maybe base the appearance of the character around that, with tubes or something sprawling out of it, I don't know.

But yeah, you're definitely going somewhere here, and linguistically, it was very enjoyable to read. I would just think about those things.