Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27012445-20160716181703/@comment-27012445-20160719215715

Thanks buddy, for the review. I have the terrible proofreading skills so your notes observations on grammar very much appreciated. Now the observations on the contents, I wasn't in total agreement, but after consideration I found you were mostly correct. I have gone back into the content and tighten up the story. Thank you for your comments, I now have a much better story now