Talk:The Zebra/@comment-39525970-20190520022343

This was quite a an good Creepypasta! It has some errors, such as the semicolon in the beginning but the whole story made sense and the plot wasn't predictable. The only thing wrong about the whole thing about Ms. Valerie being a cultist wasn't very effective. It would be better if you just called her a murderer. Overall, this is a great Creepypasta and I can't wait to see more from you!