Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35934353-20190709002402/@comment-9041013-20190710155317

I'll second what Dr Bob said.

That and the ending feels like a typical "random generalized madness" trope, which is never good. Why does she think everything will be actually okay? Supernatural involvement that suddenly kind of appears or she is having a really weird psychotic breakdown. Neither option is very good here.

This needs a better flow, and to be more sensible to the readers, I'd say.