Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26444017-20180905233106/@comment-26444017-20180906170633

The idea put forth is that the problem isn't war, it's the people that cause it. You can have all of the things in the poem without war. Mass deaths have happened because of disease, Greed and polution run rampant regardless, and mental damage is on the rise. The only one that's tougher to distance is economic hardship, though that can happen through shred business practice as well, like what happened with the banana republics around Honduras. But plenty of people blame war as a whole when these things happen, instead of looking at the people that called for it in the first place.

Additionally, in the past, and specifically with the world wars, countries needed to amp up production to a ridiculous degree. That sort of factory slave driving constant production almost certainly polluted the air and possibly water around it. Couple that with the poverty and greed and all around nastiness associated with war, and pollution is definitely on the table. Maybe people don't always recongize it, but they should.

However, that stanza did give me a ton of problems. I may end up rewriting it. Not sure yet.

As far as a pro war concept, I really don't know enough about the good that has come out of war to put that together. Couple that up with, it'd be rather difficult to make that feel creepy or ominous or depressing. Maybe that's just a hurdle for me, I don't know.

But, in any case, I have some rewriting to do.