Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27080023-20151019223340/@comment-27012445-20151023123455

This was written very well, there could be some further slimming down to make it a better read, but all in good writing. I really wasn't into the plot and the overt broken heart protagonist really doesn't appeal to me, but that is not your fault, it's mine. However, you might find that this type of story will only appeal to a specific group or age. As for the rituals, they kind of fell flat. Each task was kind of bland and a bit unoriginal, never creepy or unnerving. I never felt any danger for the protagonist through his quest. My very first story was a ritual, why don't you check it out? It might help you. The Sounding of the Fifth Trumpet