Talk:A Room/@comment-24704351-20140318213547

That might have been an almost-decent story if it had been condensed to about a third its current length, and ffs proofread these things before you post them. Nearly every sentence had a misspelling, a malapropism, or just something that was awkwardly worded. I gave it a chance because it came up on the list of currently popular stories, so I assumed it would get good at some point. As it stands, it was like trying to eat a massive bowl of bland, undercooked white rice, hoping something delicious is on the bottom, but the only thing at the bottom of the bowl was more unseasoned rice. The repetitive monotony of it seemed to aspire to be creepy, but all it was was vaguely depressing. And the dialog, man? The dialog was horribly cheesy, man.