Talk:Cartoon/@comment-17758905-20150123214820

I think this story has way too many commas in it. I even edited some sentences to make sure there was less commas because you were making tons of run-on sentences. Everything else checked out fine to me, just that you had too many run-ons.

Anyway, I didn't find the story that intriguing. In fact, I predicted the child becoming a killer ahead of time. Oh, and a child is nothing to be scared about considering she's not going to be very old. Anybody can take her on. Plus, a child wouldn't get away with murder easily. The cops would have arrested her within minutes after they found out the crime.