Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20180819032430/@comment-9041013-20180820104023

I think the idea is lovely but you just tell way too much for the topic to work on this site, for me. Mass Shootings are awfully common so we're kind of desentized to the issue. It's not making us feel as bad as it should.

So here's my proposal, Instead of telling us how he goes from house to house shooting people use some metaphor. For example him calling his pistol his Conductor's baton. You cut off there, and then go on to show how he's going around the avenue playing his magnificent symphony, you could throw in a hint of him killing people by describing him describing his music in colors, shades of red specifically.

Just go about and display him having fun pretending to be a Maestro, that would make sense, because he was slowly breaking down anyway.

Either that or paint him as painter who paints his art work with people... just describe it in a more subtle manner.

There's a scene in American Horror Story where a school shooting occurs and all we see is the feet of the shooter and hear the sounds of whatever is happening, this is very much less is more. Same should applied here.

Obviously though, the ending should be him revealing he had a gun and back to the silence trope.

That's just my take on the whole thing.