Talk:Grandma's Coffin/@comment-5733573-20180423114453

This story is way too forced, and too many things are just handed too the reader. For example, the description of Grandma waking up in the coffin doesn't require that her survival in the hospital be spelled out, nor does the ending need to be explained the way it is.

This story loses credibility in more important ways, though. First of all, even if we concievably believe that Grandma wasn't embalmed, there's no way the son would have heard her from above ground. Second, there's no way that nobody is going to a) notice and b) stop a child who's madly clawing at a freshly filled in grave, especially given how long it would take for him to not just get to the coffin, but dig out enough that he could open it.

Furthermore, the idea just isn't very original. Poe and a bunch of other authors got there first. I would love to see you take this idea and try to spin it in a fresh new way. Maybe check out the Writer's Workshop and see what the folks there have to say.