Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-11243334-20180608081220/@comment-9041013-20180609192636

That's very unbelievable, if I had to compare this to a movie it'd compare this to The Room. It's mentally weird, feels like it's meant to be a feel good story because in the end the conflict is somewhat resolved and all is pretty much dandy.

The characters are unrealistic, the scenario is unrealistic and this whole thing is just weird.

Perhaps try reading some other stories and material about famous real life criminals to come up with something more sound.