Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31308655-20170617020310/@comment-31308655-20170617025606

Alright, first off I do acknowledge certain mistakes, but in the copy of my story that you deleted, there was not this much content. Second, I was actually thinking of making the theme more of an 'experiment-gone-wrong' type, but then remembered that it is noted as one of the general cliches on the Cliches/Tropes list page, so I kinda scrapped the idea. Third, I personally enjoy the idea of combining tenses as it give a sense of detachment to reality, something I was trying to achieve (Not Psychosis-type, though). Fourth, 2nd person is a rarely-used perspective because the type of literature being written usually does not fit with the theme. However, creepypasta stories seem to take this perspective levels higher with their basic context and/or genre. Finally, I do see in certain parts ("Newfound strength and hormones fill your body...") where it becomes a tongue-twister, but in most other cases, it seems to run with the basic story. Anyways, thanks for helping out, I'll be sure to keep these suggestions in mind when I'm re-phrasing my story!

Have a great day!