Talk:Dami and Jaino/@comment-25326117-20141108073142

1. Instead of "I miss you". maybe put the period in the quotation marks like "I miss you."

2. Isn't 'any more' one word 'anymore?'

3. Isn't it supposed to be 'their doors closed simultaneously almost as it was meant to be across the city two clicks of a latch happened at the same time?'

4. Maybe, I am just being nitpicky, but I think 'lay naked in her bed' would sound much better than 'lie naked in her bed,' because they are speaking in the past tense, right?

To summarize, the creepypasta was alright. I think Jaino had some serious mental issues, especially from the rough background she was coming from. How did the cops come upon them? Did somebody call the cops?