Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26425680-20160812035939/@comment-29015383-20160816194304

Shows how good my attention to reading detail is. Didn't notice a single thing until skimming over Christian's comment with each little titbit highlighted. Darnit! I'll just continue to hide behind 'English is not my native language' and leave grammatical and structural points to him, and just look at story and characters myself!

I loved the story. The style seems to be light-hearted, which I also noticed in Christian's colab WIP. You guys going for humor in this colab, or is it a coincidence? Somehow you both are making it work, though I do feel that the lighthearted tone downplays the creepy haunt factor of the motel somewhat, but that could well just be me. I have no idea how to up that anyway, and it doesn't exactly detract from the story.

I liked the characters and how each displayed their personalities. Each one was clearly recognizable and unique, and they all had their own little goal during the story, from escaping ghosts, to just getting through another normal night. Don't think I have anything for you in terms of improvements, so I'll just leave this with a 'great job'