Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25239760-20140729192147/@comment-24957984-20140729215839

Well, the few things that are really wrong there makes the pasta unpassable without going through Spinoff Appeal.

The plot is very cliché and laughable. What pretty much happens is "Omg I love this game, now I played this version, gaaah, I'm terrified, ZOMG, this happened now, now I'm even more terrified, never gonna see this again!", and that's it. Pretty much what everyone does in these kind of pastas.

The video games category is blacklisted because of this, and also, the way you made the images made this confusing to read.

I'd suggest going through Spinoff Appeal, like I said before, and see if you'll be able to post here as an article.