Talk:The Bread of My Body/@comment-25011469-20140618204124

So clicked 'Random Pasta' and eneded up here and I'm sorry to say but my god this is awful. Rather than write a messy rant here's a list of issues

1. Ellipsis - They are useless unless someone is talking or thinking.

2. Where does this take place because no western nation (in 2005) would burn down a town out of the fear an " "understudy" going to take on the life of religious murder." Religious or not, no government would let it happen.

3. "...he video taped the final two murders, a woman Mary Shavner and himself..."- He murdered himself? You mean he commited suicide. Why would his suicide be counted as a murder?

4. So he died the second he pulled the trigger from the poison? What the hell? Also CSI wouldn't determine that, it'd be a coroner and even they would have a hard time coming to that conclusion.

5. Even if this a joke it fails because this is simply not at all funny.

Sorry again but 0/10