Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-37967823-20190305065519/@comment-9041013-20190305213120

Uhh i don't really what to say. Med personnel shouldn't share private info of patients so this was weird. It just kept getting weirder. The story doesnt have enough meat for this kind of conclusion because it seems just awfully rushed and the whole tone is almost comical.

Build it up, give it more more build, make the reader connect to the characters, feel for them, dread about theit well being and then lead to this revalation.

As it is now, it comes off somewhat silly like youve read a few stories and thought "i can do it too". Its not that easy and takes a bunch of time, remember that