Talk:The Bloat/@comment-25033184-20140622035118

Although the other comments are correct, you can fix many of these mistakes easily. First, maybe add that he was in the woods going hunting? Seems a bit more logical. Second, Spell checking is ALWAYS a good idea. Finally, try reading your story out loud and try to find sentences that dont flow very well then change them or go an extra length and have someone proofread it. Overall this story is pretty good, i would give the plot a 8/10. Good job ^_^ you just need to do a few touch ups!