Talk:The Endings/@comment-29693629-20170630154939

It's a bit pretentious, innit? You've got a big vocabulary, which is great, but brevity tends to work better for horror. All those ten dollar words smother the dread. Plus your protagonist comes off as an edgy tryhard, especially considering how young he is. The idea of a shock video site that causes people to kill themselves is a good one, maybe focus more on that than the inner monologue of Mr. Ow The Edge.