Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25656467-20141110180320

I once had an idea of a Creepypasta, where a whole research facility was operated by men and women, but they were fired when AI Workers took place of their work, they manage to get jobs though, and their lifes go on normally for 27 years, then the research was shut down and closed, in the same year our protagonist loses contact with the ex-coworkers, he finds nothing about that, and decides to look for the old facility, he was the janitor, and luckily, he still had the keys, inside the facility he discovers what he shouldn't have.

Of course i wont start the story like that! That's a nutshell of what happens in first place, where do i have to improve? Anything else i should take in consideration? Thanks for reading 