Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20160705183801/@comment-24101790-20160710040719

Dr. Frank N. Furter wrote: -snip-

Thanks, I corrected the mechanical issues you listed and tried to explain myself a little better after the protagonist makes the original shift. I assumed that the protagonist through his body was on something like auto-pilot and he would be able to return at any time (after sorting through the other realities), but coming across the brain-dead version of him that he was unable to control made him realize that his original body was likely brain-dead and since he can't control those empty shells, he couldn't return.

I may/may not remove the "I am a horrible person" just due to the fact that it feels justified ("I would sacrifice another person just to buy myself a few more hours. I am a horrible person."). How would anyone feel in a situation in which they were sacrificing other people for a temporary benefit. I do realize that it's a bit more of telling and not showing, but I also feel like up to this point he really hasn't faced those consequences of his actions and now is just realizing how terrible everything he's doing is. I'll give it some thought on whether to leave it up or remove it before I post it tomorrow.

Once more, thanks to BlizzardLemon, ChristianWallis, Dr. Frank N. Furter, and MikeMacdee for the help.