Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-36393004-20181103040539/@comment-9041013-20181103180038

Saw the ending from Sirius A, it's just not good if I know what is exactly going to happen. It's also very dry so the ending is like "yeah saw this coming... ehhh"

Also, I think this, or something very similar was already posted once.

How about having this girl encounter the old woman and find an old photgraphy development room with nothing out of the ordinary, including various photos of previous captures sporting various appearences only to kind of drift off and be surprised by the old woman taking a picture of her which traps her soul in a photo. It makes it somewhat more surprising, because you can think the old lady just killed her "students" or something. Avoid the speech about the capturing of one's soul, because it kills the whole point.