Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25975226-20150203072201/@comment-5321651-20150204060119

This was pretty good.

In terms of grammar and punctuation, it was very solid.

But this sentence: Honey, that woman had called her. That’s what she called Samuel.

That sentence has been in ever single story I have ever read about a child dying or going missing. It's so overused. Also, seeing as the woman was actually evil, it doesn't really mean anything.

Wasn't really expecting that ending, and I really liked it.. Was the blonde hair meant to mean anything? Was she her mother, or some sexual predator?

Although, I don't really like the plot. It's just not to my taste. I can appreciate a good story, though, even if it's not my kind of story.

You've done a great job.