Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-17834624-20140721040440/@comment-17834624-20140721073052

Well, okay. So, how do you suppose that I'm going to fix the problems in it? I'm following only my ideas and what the community has recommended to me in the past.

Notice how I mentioned how the teacher "had received essays on USBs and CDs before", and she feels dread because she knows that she can help him, but knows that she can't unless she understands his problems.

The bold formatting was done improperly, and I blame part of it on Wikia's strange ways and myself, for even bothering with bold formatting as most of the community abhors it.

Maybe I should throw in some gore? Yeah, that seems about right on what the community likes. Mindless, unnecessary gore that's nothing to do with the story. The community likes that, right? Yeah, they do from what I've seen.

Could you note the parts of the story that you find problematic, as you said "logic flaws" and "tense issues"?