Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35711173-20190515084101/@comment-9041013-20190516083522

DrBobSmith wrote: Bloody Spaghetti,

I am not upset. I am honestly appreciative for the time you spent away from your own writing. I know you are genuinely trying to help me and your critique has often been the difference between blah and something I can be proud of.

No, I don't agree with everything you said. The common interpretation of the song is that it is describing just an atomic apocalypse. That doesn't fit the third verse, and it isn't my style. It would fit your style, and I think you could make a very good piece if you had drawn this song.

As for it being the second worst piece in the contest, I didn't bring it to the Workshop because I was satisfied or proud with it. This was just draft 0. Based on pondering the feedback here, I expect draft 1 will be roughly half composed of the material here.

Thank you again, and I very much look forward to your next review.

Dr. Bob Well great. I did reference Damnation 101 specifically to perhaps encourage you to take your own course with the idea I set forth there.

I do have to agree that it just doesn't feel much, in general, just doesn't feel. I got the feeling that I am told "Living in a dystopian society is bad" but I didn't feel this bad. You should somehow make us feel that kind of bad. Hmm..

Wish you the best of luck.