Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-3541151-20141204145634

Now, when I first read this pasta, I honestly thought it not only well written and origina but revolutionizing the Ritual Pasta. A different kind of Game Pasta. Reading it again, I have to go back on my former opinions. Now, I believe the writer could produce something really good, original too, but this isn't it. It's tedius, the characters are either bland or cold, and the story is kind of drawn out. There seem to be a lot of plot left out, like how to play the game, what the tasks mentioned, were. I don't feel like it let you in on everything, and it doesn't seem like it's not entirely sure either. It focuses too much on the characters, and as I've said, that didn't work out well! It seems like it was written in one setting, with some effort and creative ideas, but too rushed all the same. I'd like to hear your thoughts on the story and my Critique. I give the Cellphone Game a 5/10. 