Talk:Teeth.jpg/@comment-24360486-20141110044204

Lilly and Daniel left on the train at 11:30pm. She couldn't have sent the "help me" text to her girlfriend at 1:30am when her phone was left at the house. Also how is narrator typing this story if its implied Daniel killed and or mutilated him? Decent story but overuse of cliches along with several glaring spelling/grammatical errors and plot holes took me out of immersion into the story. Needs reworked and edited to qualify as classic POTM material in my opinion. 5/10