Talk:Better Luck Next Time/@comment-26886981-20160919153744

I enjoyed reading this. The idea of playing cards against an entity with the cards seamingly moving on their own is a creepy thought. You could tell the stakes were high which made it all the more suspenseful. I am curious why she decided to play this card game in the first place though?

Just a little suggestion. I found the line 'She pulled up a wicker chair so worn it was if it were its original condition' read slightly awkwardly. It's not exactly incorrect but perhaps 'She pulled up a wicker chair so worn, it was as if had always been in that condition'. Find some way of making it read a little better.

The last point I'd like to make is I liked this story a lot. Enough for me to ask your permission to make a narration. I'm only a small channel, but I will of course give credit and provide a link to this story in the description. Let me know what you think.