Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25843185-20150707234707/@comment-25843185-20150708202626

Whitix wrote: This entire thing just feels incomplete.

There's no context to what is happening in this story. I get that it revolves around time machines and the future, but there are some things that need to be explained. What is this game? I get that it's a Hunger Games style scenario where the winner gets to use a time machine or something, but what is its purpose? Why is it there? Who runs it? Who participates in it? Why does our narrator want to win it so badly (His motivations are never explained, and while they're hinted at, there's not enough to understand his motivations)? How do these people suck t he life out of someone and why?

These are just a few of the many questions I had while reading your story. You need to heavily expand on this because the reader doesn't know what's going on with the sparse details you've provided.

Thank you for the feedback, I'll be sure to