Talk:Midwest/@comment-24190515-20140610144959

Good story. I loved the imagery, especially at the beginning. I think that you should have showed off more of it when you went in for the gross-out portion. I mean, you demonstrated your talent for it at the start of the story (very vivid and fresh). I think that you are capable of describing the barn scene and encounter with the creature in a better way.

My only real criticism is what seems to be your use of crude language merely for the sake of vulgarity. As I've mentioned in some of my previous posts, I'm not a fan of that. I don't believe that it's necessary to avoid offensive language altogether, but I think that it's sparse use makes it all the more effective when it is used. Just my two cents.