Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29927891-20180729195042/@comment-9041013-20180730091551

This it? wow.

Anyways, like BobSmith said, you need to post the whole story for people to evaluate it properly. This first part is kind of lacking, do mention why the parents are having issues, why did they have to move to a shitty house etc.

This seems a little like a forced introudction you've decided to write because you have to have an entroduction.

Also, if you we go by what you've told us, I don't see how this horrible event was so horrible if NOBODY COULD ACTUALLY REMEMBER IT... you know what I mean? Everyone has to remember it, but not want to speak about it.