Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181104231513/@comment-28428152-20181105201656

BloodySpghetti wrote: Bonobo moth aliens? You wot mate?! Well that's a nice little story you've got here. Though I have a hard time believing anyone in their right mind would dismiss bleeding from the lungs as "Just the ole' flu". You should seek actual treatment when you have even the ole' flu, because that shit alone kills hundreds of thousands annually. So the whole story could've been avoided if only John was not a dumbass... but sure, let's play with it, he's a young fellow whose a dumbass by nature.

We do have a cure for all the Plagues, in fact, unless it's Pneumonic or Septicemic, treatment reduces mortality to 10%. Getting quick treatment for Pneumonic Plague reduces risk of mortality which nears a 100% without treatment, meaning you could potentially survive untreated, very unlikely, but probably happened a couple of times during The Black Death. Treatment is antibiotics. Soooo he had a chance all along.

"We good aliens, but we naively vengeful" - Keeps on playing with the aspect of these altruistic bonobo like culturaly aliens but still provides a good reason for them not to save him.

So overall not very bad.

Also, shameless self promotion plug; I wrote an alien story too. I could make the main character a little bit more self-aware of his idiocy for not going to the hospital, though obviously if he went to the hospital when he noticed John coughing blood they could have treated the plague effectively and thus there would be no story, so he's gonna have to stay a dumbass for the plot. Would consider having the aliens make it so they can't leave, but then it would take away from the dynamic of the aliens being the good guys and the humans the bad guys

And there's not really a cure for any of the 3 plagues, its more of just pumping the body full of antibiotics and hoping that it works. WIth bubonic plague, it's pretty easy to treat it, but with pneumonic plague you only have about a 24 hour window after the first symptoms to get treatment, and after that it's pretty risky, and does kill within 2-4 days

Glad you liked it, I'll check out yours real quick