Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35720336-20180529225927/@comment-35720336-20180530023229

Kolpik wrote: I liked this, but I'm not sure what's up with the second person viewpoint in the paragraph that starts with, "I remember." I found it confusing. I'm reading a story about a scared woman, and then all of a sudden... I'm the scared woman?

"COME OUT!" helped me to shake off the confusion, and then the story picks up again. I'd recommend working on that part of the story, but as of right now that's my only real issue with the story. If I think of anything else I'll let you know. Keep writing.

Oh yeah, thanks for adding a new word to my vocabulary, pulchritude