Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20190730183504/@comment-35711173-20190731001035

I agree with the comments above. Not sure on the Iron Maiden.

I don't have a good feel for the grocery purchaser. Are they male or female? As a guy, if I am going out at night I have something with me. As I am walking, I am thinking about how to take on anybody I approach and am holding that something with me. It may be in a bag or a pocket, but it is ready.

Girls so often do goofy stuff. If they carry anything, it's in their purse. Then it's something like a little girly key chain thing of mace. Yet who is an attacker more likely to grab?

There is no direct emotional connection. What does the person being grabbed at the end feel? We can guess from behaviors but aren't sure. There is no "grab you, take you home and use you" scene.