Talk:Looks Like We Got a Live One Here, Boys/@comment-25941663-20150204102932

I have found some weird italics too (I think):

'I know, Aunty, she had spoken softly back, Yarrow is only my forest name- you can call me Megan. She had whispered in her ear, trying not to notice how skinny her dear Aunt had become, how much hair she had lost, please, call me Megan.'

From the title, I thought that this had to do with fishing... I don't know why.

Also, I have to point it out, your characters seem to be smoking a lot of joints in the stories. Hmmm...

Anyway, back on topic.

I liked the brutal end the parents found. It was an emotional stab in the heart, as the characters were very well developed and I had grown fond of them. Their death really drove it home.

But after the death, the story (in my opinion) lost its footing. I don't know why, but it just didn't do it for me. It was more silly than creepy, with only the last few lines rescuing what would have been a pretty unsatisfying ending.

Apart from that, I really enjoyed it. It didn't have the same sense of mystery and suspense the 'Abalone Thief' had, but it is nice to see you trying out different stuff. All in all, it was very nicely written and a joy to read.

I am looking forward to reading your next piece.