Talk:There's Something Between the Gears/@comment-25941663-20150901214439

This was amazing. It was suspenseful, and at times quite creepy and unsettling. I don't really have much to add to what other commenters have said.

Instead I will commend your ability to add in some small details that set in the tone of your story perfectly. Like "gears grinding something softer". Little touches like this really made this something different.

I will have to disagree with the commenters that said Lucas' end was underwhelming. I loved the fact that he didn't even give a fight. Despite being accustomed to hardships and despite his experience as an undercover agent (something that needs balls and strong will), he was crushed like he was nothing. If he had given a fight, he would have diminished the power of the machine. But because that wasn't the case, we got to witness how insignificant man is to this machine. And it made this all the more terrifying. That last scene, with him falling towards the machine under the earth... wow, what an ending.

Just like your other stories, this left me thinking about not only the plot, but about the ideas you bring up through them. Great work. One of my favourites.