Talk:Night of the Shadow Man/@comment-5269370-20150909202129

Evident in your story Jacko, you have a great way of developing characters and setting the background of a story, and it really shines in this too. The character's anguish was brilliantly described, and I thought his desperate attempt to help himself with the prescription drugs really brought this out. You could really sympathize with him.

The nightmare sequence was extremely intense, and the weird hallucinations of him warping into his surroundings was unique but brilliant. Most Mental Illness stories on this site focus a lot on the character's traits without so much as going into what the character perceives beyond seeing or hearing a few creepy things here and there. You really brought his surroundings into it though, and you did it excellently.

I also loved the end, when we got a description of the physical effects that it has on him, contrasted against the internal effects that we saw throughout the rest of the story. I loved that. We got an all-round view of how it affected his life and the brief physical description seemed to really emphasize it.

I loved it man, great job. Keep up the great work. 8.4/10

Something to note though. I noticed this in Jacko as well, but I didn't say anything of it because I thought it was just a one time thing. Both stories had quite a few grammar errors in them. You just need to make sure to read over your stories thoroughly before you post them. Just some advice. It's really not that big of a deal though. It didn't take away from either story, plus someone is bound to fix them at some point