User talk:TheAzumangaDaiohFan/Archive 12

Day After Tomorrow is the Day!
I promise that I haven't forgotten! I'll get back to you on it on Wednesday :D Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  15:03, March 27, 2017 (UTC)


 * I am around halfway through the updated version and I like it so far. I really liked the part where Earl mentions that it is customary for one to get badges to even make it to Kanto. It seems to foreshadow that Emily will go around collecting badges, but doesn't lock her in to needing to. She can decide to go do something else part way through if she desires. I would suggest removing the 'Ehh.' at the end of the very first paragraph, but that's just my opinion on it.


 * I'm going to bed soon, but I'll try to get through the rest of it after I wake up or tomorrow. I've had a lot of doctor appointments (dad's) to go to recently, and I'm sick on top of everything else. I've been feeling really guilty about taking so long and you've been super patient, therefore I wanted to let you know that I remembered and read through some of it. Thank you for being really cool about this. Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  23:11, March 30, 2017 (UTC)


 * Yay, Onix! I like how you are describing the Pokemon as animals rather than simply going by name. It takes more effort and would give newcomers a better perspective than just a name. I like how dark it got, that was entirely unexpected by me. You made that Onix downright terrifying XD Good work! Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  02:13, April 1, 2017 (UTC)


 * Good choice, good choice! Thanks, I have been trying to write a lot in my spare time. It is difficult for me to do a lot these days, have lots of headaches.


 * The world always needs more "good" romance stories! I liked Turtles in Time, but Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles II: Arcade is still my favorite (first video game and first video game I beat).


 * I thought that was what you were going for with the "Ehh", but it felt really out of place to me. That said, I always encourage comedy - even in dark works - when it can be managed. I bet you could find other places to stick comical occurrences :) Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  07:36, April 3, 2017 (UTC)


 * I say go for it. One thing I like about Tomoko, the lead character from Watamote, is that she occasionally does shit things (like not delivering her brother's High School Application like she was supposed to, so that he'd have to stay near her). We all do bad things every once in a while, even if we don't mean to or realize it. That's what makes us human. Points for realism? XD Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  01:28, April 5, 2017 (UTC)


 * I like what you got, but you might look into shortening the plagiarism bits into a couple sentences (like maybe mention the topic she is doing and that she plagiarizes it). The description of her going about plagiarism is a tad bit long and doesn't add any tension as is, in my opinion. Hmm... I think you should have the server lady catch her, but have her slip away in some sort of comical fashion since it is a Romance. Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  02:00, April 6, 2017 (UTC)

Oh, okay! Makes total sense :D

I think that's a great decision. I was starting to wonder if you were feeling it anymore on the Cape Cod Pasta, like, you just kept getting stuck/taking breaks from it. I don't know, it just felt like you were forcing yourself to do something you weren't enjoying. I hope that things go smoothly for 'Cut Content' and the Pokemon Story!

I love this. That reads so... right. She does something shitty (the fake money, tho really, the hotel is being shitty with their prices XD) and then goes to be apologetic/nice (with the all sorrys). It perfectly showcases how flawed and sympathetic she is. The guy giving up the bike without a fuss is comical as well, which counteracts the rather dark situation at hand. Buckle up!  I'm going to be popular  04:14, April 12, 2017 (UTC)

Shear Madness
I've read that seal pups are initially afraid of the water. It's like with people- new things can be scary at first, but then you adjust. Oh, bless Shrek's heart! I'm glad his wool went to a good cause, and he looked so cute after he was sheared! I was sad to learn of his passing. The quote I don't get from the article is, “He looked like some biblical creature.” Um, well, yes, sheep are creatures that appear often in the Bible. I do daily Bible study and I don't understand what he was implying with that line. I wonder what kinds of illustrations his Bible has.

In case you didn't see it, Diex left the following message on my page: "Vegetarians are people who don't consume meat at all, pescetarians are vegetarians who only consume fish meat or other seafood and vegans don't consume animal products at all. The one in the last category can be very dogmatic and delusional in their beliefs. Diex with the latest useless facts of the day." Not to rag on vegans, but I have to agree that there are vegans who are delusional. By the way, there was once a vegan restaurant at the Dayton Mall, and it had a screen talking about celebrities who were vegan. I had to laugh, though, because one of the ones they showed had been in rehab for drug addiction. I think that kind of defeated the purpose of running the ad. Raidra (talk) 15:17, March 27, 2017 (UTC)

Happy 2000!
Hey, I was leaving a note on Vroom's page and saw you'd left a message! Congrats on the milestone! ~blows party horn~

~laughs~ Ah, the Pokemon edition of the Bible! of course!

Yes, I remember that. Hmm... my favorites are Hats Off for Super Sloth, This Story is Brought to You by Sloths, and Kenji and Yuki: A Japanese Tale. I'm leaning toward "Hats Off for Super Sloth". In honesty I kind of hesitated putting in that line because I know some things you never quite get used too (You just maybe get less anxious). I hate needles too, and I couldn't even look the first time a doctor drew my blood. The weird thing is I'm a blood donor (so situations like this don't happen). I've done it a number of times over the years and I still get nervous. A friend of mine once told me that the thing they put in your arm for blood donation technically isn't a needle (He said it was a hard plastic tube) and I thought, "It stings like a needle, so big deal!" I use a trick I learned from a nurse when I was little and had to get my booster shots. The nurse counts to three. On three you blow like you're blowing out a million candles, and that's when they insert the needle. I've found that this helps. Raidra (talk) 16:24, March 29, 2017 (UTC)
 * Yesterday we stopped at a restaurant for milkshakes and the restaurant's claw machine included a couple plush sloths. The weird thing is they were black and white. I'm sure there can be melanic sloths, but making a toy sloth black seems like an odd choice. The same machine also had light brown bears and plush llamas in a variety of colorful patterns (polka dots, army camouflage, tie-dye fluorescent green, etc.), so I don't know why the company didn't make the sloths either natural color or some whimsical color. Say what you want to about the Stoner Sloth public service announcements, but at least the people who made those knew what color sloths usually are. Raidra (talk) 22:41, March 30, 2017 (UTC)

Shiny sloths
I've seen plotlines like that done time and time again, but do what you want.

That joke made me look up the shiny forms of the Slakoth line. I have no problems with Slakoth and Vigoroth, but, as I noted here, Slaking is one of my least favorites. I noted, "I can take an ugly Pokemon, but ugly and useless?" I swear, if I face a Slaking on Pokemon Showdown, I'm going to wreck it so hard. Raidra (talk) 16:27, March 31, 2017 (UTC)
 * I'll have to sit this one out. No offense, but I really don't have any interest in this story, and thus I can't offer criticism, good or bad. Don't let that stop you, though. Like I said, do what you want. In my art and writing I do a lot of things simply because I want to do them. People have different tastes, and I appreciate your understanding. "However, what I think makes or breaks romance stories is the main couple themselves. I think this is because it is a type of story/genre where character development is extremely important. I mean if the couple shares little to no chemistry with one another or there's not a whole lot of character development going on, the whole thing falls apart." I think you're right. There have been a lot of couples that are put together for no discernible reason, and you wonder, "Why were these two put together?"


 * Hey, at least her experience at the all-you-can-eat buffet went better than this- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qioaVomhDDA. I'm actually disappointed that they cut the clip short because the full version has him eating other things, including an old boot filled with wasabi.


 * "But I think we can agree that the story will be a better romance tale than Fifty Shades." That's a given! What confuses me is that people gushed about the books, but then when the movie came out, they talked about how terrible the whole thing was. I agree, but why weren't you all saying all that before? What, it's okay for a literary character to be abused, but not a film character? Part of it may be because a domestic abuse awareness group spoke out before the film's premiere (They'd probably spoken out about the books before then, but they got more attention because of the movie premiere), but if you're going to criticize abuse, you should criticize it regardless of the medium. YouTuber Linkara did a video criticizing the incredibly horrible Avengers#200 (I cannot describe how terrible an issue this is, but I can try if you want me too, or at least give you the link to the 41-minute video), and someone commented, "We found it guys, a love story that is worse than Twilight."


 * I came across this article and had a flashback to Yo Yogi. Raidra (talk) 21:54, March 31, 2017 (UTC)

Fifty Shades of Shade
Thank you for that. :-D I appreciate your understanding because, like you joked about, there are people out there who throw fits and resort to name-calling if someone isn't completely fixated on everything they're doing. How are the other drafts coming along?

I'd forgotten that Fifty Shades started as Twilight fan-fiction. That fact is yet another reason to hate both things. I'm glad that there are other people, men and women, who have the guts to say, "Hey, this is trash!" and not gush about it just because it's gotten attention. "An orig­i­nal work, and said to us that James had war­ranted the books were, indeed orig­i­nal." I don't fully understand what this sentence is trying to say, so you know it's a bad sign for a book when a publisher says something this inane and confusing. It says a lot that a member of the BDSM community spoke out against it. I imagine most people in that community are royally ticked off when someone tries to excuse or condone abuse of any kind. By the way, was that a clip of David Bowie in that Goodreads review? The hair looked familiar.

Jeff Foxworthy once said he was on airplane and got a look at some women's magazine. A poll of readers claimed the ideal fantasy man was "a dangerous man". Jeff noted, "The women who said that were probably thinking of James Bond or somebody, but in real life when you get a dangerous man you end up with him being led away in handcuffs while you lean out the window shouting, 'Lock him up! Lock his *** up!'"

Since I want to end on a non-Fifty Shades note, here's this- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IyxRf5CAFio Raidra (talk) 03:07, April 1, 2017 (UTC)

Sheep Hut for One
I think that one Bowie cameo was infinitely better than anything you'll find in the entire Fifty Shades series. You may have known this already, but I just recently found out that his eyes were different. It turns out that when he was in school, he and one of his mates fought over a girl. Bowie's left eye was injured, and as a result the pupil was always enlarged.

The smell of cherries is a great touch because of the Japanese connection to cherry trees and blossoms. Speaking of the most Japanese things in the games, you know how Erica is one of the most Japanese gym leaders? Well, a day or two ago I saw a Let's Play Pokemon Blue video by Johneawesome in which he decided to give Erica the voice of a slightly manic and phlegmy British gentleman. I just cracked up because of how incongruous it was. Here's another funny Pokemon video I found recently- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6mGTrcENUtQ.

Even if you decide not to try posting it, I'd like to read the ending if you decide to finish it.

Sometimes you come across a sentence that reads like there's a word missing. That sentence sounds like it has at least a couple whole clauses missing. "I looked up this quote on Google and I found a search result that's about the history of LSD." Well, that says it all, doesn't it?

That's a very good point, and they should totally do that in an episode! There was an episode of Batman: The Animated Series with three robbers called Fox, Shark, and Vulture. It turned out that they were all successful businessmen born into rich families, and they started committing robberies because they were bored. The episode ended with the leader claiming that he'd never end up in prison, and then him in prison. X-D I saw some reviewer claim, "Oh, their motivations were stupid!" and I thought, "Well, that's the point!" There are some criminals who feel driven to commit crime for a number of reasons, but others do it for a thrill, or to hurt people, and it's foolish to assume all criminals have the same kind of background and motivation. Raidra (talk) 19:06, April 2, 2017 (UTC)
 * Your commentary reminded me of something else. I recently became a fan of Yamcha from Dragon Ball Z. Yeah, I know the jokes, like, "Magikarp vs. Yamcha! Magikarp used Splash! Yamcha fainted!" Well, I recently found out that there are Bulma & Vegeta fan-fics which paint Yamcha as a horribly abusive monster and Vegeta as a knight in shining armor. That's unfair to Yamcha and dismissive of the source material, so needless to say Yamcha fans hate that kind of fan-fiction (even if they accept the pairing of Bulma and Vegeta). It took me a while to find it, but here's a comic someone made in rebuttal- http://aremke.deviantart.com/art/Popular-Misconceptions-182512823. Raidra (talk) 23:28, April 2, 2017 (UTC)

For the love of bread
I'm about to go to bed, so I'll have to cut this short for now, but I'll explain so you don't have to wonder all night. The commentary I was referring to was about how some people (presumably without reading the book or seeing the movies) assume Fifty Shades is a great romance story simply because it has a rich guy showing interest in a girl. I think the same line of thought is at work in those Yamcha-bashing Bulma X Vegeta stories, like, "So, Bulma had a child with Vegeta, so he must be very romantic and Yamcha must be scum, hur-de-hur!" Raidra (talk) 04:07, April 3, 2017 (UTC)

Hot dog with catch-up
Okay, here we go!

That's an interesting voice for Erica, and it's honestly the least weird thing about that video. "The best part though? She falls asleep a lot!" "Weepinbell, use- ~falls asleep~"

The sad thing is I can see people trying that. On a related note, anytime someone gets their eyes dilated (at the optometrist's office) I find myself thinking of The Power Puff Girls.

Hey, you're still better at making memes than I am (though that story will have to wait for now). "IN the books and films, he constantly says he doesn't do romance." Does he ever say he's not an abusive schmuck? Because that would be a bigger lie than the not doing romance thing.

They should make "man in love with bread" the topic of the next contest.

The reason I didn't respond earlier is I'm dealing with a nasty head cold. I'm already feeling better, and I got some medicine. On a positive note, I was inspired to create a Nasty Head Cold Pokemon team for Pokemon Showdown (Sneezing the Cubchoo, Runny Nose the Beartic, Sinus Headache the Psyduck, Fever the Magmar, Coughing Fit the Koffing, and Sluggishness the Sliggoo).

I hadn't thought about it, but they make some interesting comparisons! "To what do you owe your success?" "Potent hallucinogens." "You must be really boring." X-D I also thought of this story I recounted to Vroom and Dorkpool last June. ''Yesterday I went to the Community Blood Center in Dayton, Ohio to donate. The nurse who took my vitals was named either Dalia or Daria, and at one point she brought up Batman. I jokingly told about a couple unfortunate drawings (from an official DC Comics book) which made Batman look like a heroin addict (One had a utility belt compartment with a first aid kit containing what looked like a hypodermic needle and a wad of cotton, and the other had a satellite Bat Cave with a stove littered with unidentified white packets). She jokingly claimed that Batman got people hooked on heroin (“The first packet is free!”) and that this pusher alter-ego was “Crazy Steve”. We went forth and back adding to the story. I asked, “Does Crazy Steve only wear a mask over the lower part of his face?” and she replied, “Yes, that’s how he gets the tan lines to even out!” I noted, “This is better than anything the comic book companies have come up with in years.”'' (Dorkpool suggested that she got the "Crazy Steve" name from Atop the Fourth Wall, and having watched some videos I think he's right.) Raidra (talk) 03:27, April 5, 2017 (UTC)

Sheeeeeeep!!!
Now that we know how to beep beep like a sheep, all that's left is to learn how to run in gangs like goats.

Did you know there was a legal battle over those paintings? What happened was some guy's wife or girlfriend made the paintings and he took the credit. They even made a movie about it.

I can see that, but this lady was livelier than Daria was. Bringing up the Drake & Josh Crazy Steve made me wonder which came first. It was probably the Drake & Josh version, so maybe Linkara was thinking of him when he called erratic Batman that.

I understand. Let me know if you ever decide to go back to it.

I thought of something yesterday. I don't think all main Pokemon games have this, but there are the caves that you have to light with flash in order to explore. You go through the cave, and you encounter trainers to battle. The cave was dark before your Pokemon illuminated it. I thought, "Do those trainers just wait around in the dark all day hoping someone will come along for them to challenge?" If that's the case, then all the perennial losers in the Pokemon world (Jessie, James, and Meowth of Team Rocket, Misty's Psyduck, etc.) can all hold their heads high and think, "At least I'm not as pathetic as those guys!" Raidra (talk) 03:09, April 7, 2017 (UTC)

Big Eyes in Wonderland
It used to be that I had trouble editing on Narutopedia because it wouldn't show the last line of whatever I was typing. I don't know if others had this problem or if it were just me.

There was an episode of Animaniacs (a 1990s cartoon) which spoofed The Sound of Music, and the nanny's list of her favorite things included "Pictures of children with really big eyes!" in fact, that's the only line I remember from the song. Last night I rewatched PhantomStrider's countdown of the top ten worst cartoon live action remakes, and I think the Johnny Depp version of Alice in Wonderland was number nine. He noted that the characters seemed obsessed with watching The Mad Hatter dance, so surely this dance must be something great. Then it showed the dance, followed by Strider asking, "That's it?!"

I recently saw someone somewhere make a comment about hay and it made me miss Gene Wilder all over again (Young Frankenstein had the part about a roll in the hay).

That was you? I had remembered someone saying that before. I'm assuming you didn't have to fight any trainers because they didn't see you? I'm working my way through the Let's Play Pokemon videos of Johneawesome and TheJWittz. I'm mostly through Johne's Pokemon Snap series, and I found out that there are places in which you get Pokemon to evolve by throwing an apple or a pester ball at them and knocking them into a pool. I've seen it happen twice  and I laughed out loud both times. X-D Raidra (talk) 01:37, April 8, 2017 (UTC)

Channeling the spirit of Roger Ebert
Cool! Interestingly enough I once saw a production of Little Women (as part of a class trip) and hadn't read the book. Actually, I still haven't read the book. I was never really into novels; I'm more into animal books, the Encyclopedia Brown books by Donald J. Sobol, books of weird facts, etc. On one of my blogs on this site I also noted, "When I go to the library, I browse the children's section as well as the adult section because let's face it, children's books are usually funnier, more interesting, better written, and less pretentious with better pictures."

All right! Hey, do you remember the half-hour episode of Slappy Squirrel? If not I can tell you about it. Thinking back, I feel the same way. I generally didn't like the Rita & Runt segments because it was usually Runt getting praised for nothing and Rita getting shunned or mistreated for nothing, but there were a few good, and even heartwarming, segments. I hated the Mindy & Buttons segments even more because Buttons would risk his life to save Mindy, and then Mindy's ignorant mother would scold him for some minor thing that wasn't even his fault. I think there were only two segments of that which I liked.

X-D Here's the rest of the list if you're interested- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N95f7baE0as. Roger Ebert named his second book of bad movie reviews Your Movie Sucks. The name comes from his review of Deuce Bigalow: European Gigolo, which ended with, "Speaking in my official capacity as a Pulitzer Prize winner, Mr. Schneider, your movie sucks." I realized another problem with Alice in Wonderland. It's neither an adaptation of the original book nor is it a remake of the animated film by Disney. What is it then? It's just a mess. Raidra (talk) 23:04, April 9, 2017 (UTC)

Joy for Julia
I heard about that and I think it's awesome. I heard she had been in a book or on a website previously, so I'm glad they brought her to the main show & glad they're doing such a good job with the character. I've always had issues with noise too. I'm starting to wonder if I'm autistic too (not just because of that, but also other things).

I don't know that getting terrified and running away is the best response in this case. I think the most realistic reaction would be for the protagonist, although fearful and shocked, to try to shrug it off by assuming it must be a different Lorenzo, so I think a better reaction would be looking at the tombstone for several minutes while wondering what in blazes this could mean and wondering if they should ask Roy anything.

"Dang it, I just narrowly escaped death from a giant rock snake! After the day I've had, I'm getting in to see this show, no matter what!" Raidra (talk) 21:52, April 11, 2017 (UTC)

La-La-Lorenzo
Yay! Will this be the whole story, or do you plan to add more to it? In any case, it's looking good. I was partway through the outline when I suddenly realized that the protagonist never had any interaction with Lorenzo. Well, that adds a whole new layer to it! :-O Roy and Becky seem like two damaged people. They're unsettling, but still sympathetic at times. I love how the story has a subtle horror, dealing with the kind of creepy scenarios that happen in real life. I think the end is realistic, and I love how the protagonist is thinking, "I'm outta here!"

Ouch! I once accidentally cut myself on a soda can. I don't remember why I stuck my finger into the mouth of can, but I got too close to the edge and yeah, that wasn't fun. Raidra (talk) 13:48, April 12, 2017 (UTC)

Dancing in the La-La Land- I mean, Moonlight
~laughs~ I love the Black Critic Guy's reaction to that blunder. I happened to see that when it happened. I heard someone say, "We didn't win, by the way. The real winner is Moonlight." I just thought he was being really gracious, but then he said, "This isn't a joke," and showed the envelope. There were a lot of great memes and tweets about that. Steve Harvey (who accidentally read the name of the wrong contestant at the Miss Universe pageant last year) told the Academy to call him because he could help, and M. Night Shyamalan (known for his twist endings) claimed that he had written the 2017 Oscar presentation. As for other mishaps, the great thing about the Oscar Streaker was David Niven's response to it. "Well, ladies and gentlemen, that was almost bound to happen. But isn't it fascinating to think that probably the only laugh that man will ever get in his life is by stripping off and showing his shortcomings?" X-D

I still don't know what most of the movies were about, and I really don't care. I'm more interested in daydreaming than I am in modern cinema.

I'll see what I can do. Of course I'll pass on any feedback I get.

"If you try to steal my french fried onions, you'll pull back a bloody stub!"

Yesterday my aunt had a procedure done on her left eye. Her left pupil was dilated for most of the day and I thought, "Oh, my gosh, she looks like David Bowie." Raidra (talk) 23:00, April 13, 2017 (UTC)

Five! Five pieces of vampire lore!
~cackles while lightning flashes~ Seriously, though, I really like your vampire lore. It respects previous lore while adding some refreshing and lighthearted touches. I especially like number four (One of the few things a Vampire is weak to is holy items (i.e A Cross, Buhdist's Beads, Holy Water, etc) due to the fact that they're considered Dark-Type a.k.a unholy creatures.) because it shows you get it. I've seen people, trying to be smart alecks, say things like, "Oh, what if a vampire's Jewish?" Um, what? They're soulless corpses who prey on human beings, so they don't really have religious affiliations (nor are they atheistic). By the way, I've read that just like vampires in European tradition are said to fear crosses and holy water, vampires in Islamic tradition are said to fear the voice of the muezzin (a Muslim crier who calls the hour of daily prayers). I don't remember reading about Buddhist vampires, but I do remember stories of creatures being appeased or subdued by holy objects and prayers. Some traditions say that vampires are obsessed with counting things, so a person can distract them by scattering seeds/rice outside the door. I don't know if this inspired Count Von Count on Sesame Street or not.

That's a cool superstition. Burger King has (or did have; it's been a while since I've been) notes on some of their fry containers noting that you shouldn't worry if you find a stray onion ring in your fries because that's just an unexpected bonus. Of course, I don't eat onion rings, so I just give any I find to Mom.

Brave won over Wreck-It Ralph? Ugh. Raidra (talk) 23:25, April 15, 2017 (UTC)
 * Oops, I forgot to say, "Happy Easter." ~awkward pause~ Happy Easter! Raidra (talk) 18:21, April 16, 2017 (UTC)

Silver Bull
I've always found werewolves more interesting too. In fact, I have a number of werebeasts in my comics, both heroic and villainous. They range from traditional ones such as werewolves, werehyenas, and werejaguars to werecreatures created by chemical elixirs or the radiation from strange meteorites.

That reminds me of a quiz I read about monsters. It asked who could be killed by silver bullets, and the answer was, "Anybody, though this method is usually associated with werewolves." I think there's one thing that any sensible person can agree on. Vampires & werewolves can make for great villains and/or great sympathetic figures, but they don't make great romantic interests. Terrible Writing Advice did a sarcastic video on why having vampires and werewolves as love interests is an absolutely nonsensical idea.

I hope you and your brother are feeling better. I once had a Little Critter book about the pros and cons of Easter. For instance, you got to eat lots of candy, though you had to wait until after church, and sometimes you had trouble seeing past all the ladies' hats. You got to go hunting for Easter eggs, though sometimes you walked right past one and someone else found it. He also said sometimes you had to help younger kids find eggs, though in the next illustration he did look happy as he led a smiling younger boy to an egg, so it looks like he warmed up to the idea. It really was a neat little book which accurately portrayed life through a child's eyes. Raidra (talk) 23:23, April 16, 2017 (UTC)

Parallelogram Universe
I had three Little Critter books. One (I think) was about Christmas, and the other had Little Critter have a dream in which he turned into a fearsome monster after drinking a homemade potion. He was so fearsome that he drove everyone away. He could do whatever he wanted, but he was miserable because there was no one to tuck him in or read him a bedtime story. Then he woke up safe, in non-monster form, in his loving home. Those were neat little stories, but I eventually gave them to one of my aunts (a babysitter) so she could share them with the next generation.

Yes! Thank you! The thing about The Mandela effect is it should be a say of saying, "Oh, isn't it funny how we sometimes misremember things?" When it's used to claim, "Oh, well, this is OBVIOUSLY a sign of parallel universes!" then it becomes really lame. Why is it so freaking difficult for some people to grasp the concept of misremembering and/or misspelling things? I heard the name came from some woman saying she thought she remembered seeing a news story about Nelson Mandela dying in the 1980s (when he only died a couple years ago), and then a friend told her she seemed to remember that too. Claiming, "Oh, there's a parallel universe!" is such a far-out explanation. The most likely explanation is that the woman either A) saw a news report and just mistakenly assumed it was about Mandela (Maybe it was a funeral for some other prominent South African and Mandela was mentioned) or B) had a dream about Mandela (I once had a dream in which one of my favorite athletes died, and my Mom once had a dream that Bill Clinton was about to die. Both are still alive), and her friend either A) saw the same news report/had a similar dream or B) lied about experiencing the same thing just to troll her, and laughed about it afterward. Jeez, people, just admit you got something wrong!

I think the passages are great description. There's a lot of evocative detail, allowing the readers to put themselves in Yuki's position. At what point does Kenji discover her living there? I mean, did he know prior to this scene, or has he been out, and he won't discover she's there until later? The scene reminded me of the story in which this guy in Japan discovered that a woman had been secretly living in his apartment for months. He noticed that there were strange noises and food was disappearing. I thought, "Maybe that's why there are so many ghost stories in Japan. Maybe this happens more than we realize."

I haven't yet because we've been busy with taxes and other things. I apologize for that. I'll see what I can do today. Raidra (talk) 12:56, April 18, 2017 (UTC)

Beauty and the Taxes
I have to admit you do make a point. However, there's a certain way to do it. My view is that the beast/monster has to have a human soul/heart. For instance, there's that scene in Beauty and The Beast in which Beast rages and bellows at Belle to get out after she bothered the enchanted rose. After she flees he stops, stares in shock, and then holds his head in remorse, as if to say, "Sweet mercy, what have I done?" The Beast had a beastly appearance and temper, but he still felt emotions such as sorrow, uncertainty, and love. You also need the "beauty on the inside" theme. You'll notice that Disney didn't make the Beast look like a calendar model. Belle came to look past the outside and see what was underneath (which is why she was uncertain about the prince until she saw that he had the Beast's eyes, meaning he really was the same guy she had gotten to know and love)

So is it after the scene you just showed, the one with her discovering the fetid bedroom, or does he discover her sleeping & decide to let her sleep, and then she discovers the bedroom? In any case, I really like what you came up with for Kenjiro's father. It shows concern for his son, adds realism, and, like you said, avoids the cliche. I know I mention Roger Ebert a lot, but he hated those cliches too. In his review for Free Style he noted, "Cale and his mother argue about his career track. He dreams of making the professional motocross tour. His mom thinks he should focus on school. I think she's right. But noooo -- he has a Dream. When will there be a film about a motocross racer or skateboarder, say, who decides, the hell with it, I could break my neck. I think I'll just go to college."

Thank you, I appreciate that. Like I said, I'll pass on any feedback to you. Raidra (talk) 21:31, April 19, 2017 (UTC)

Re: Review
I'll try to get around to it this weekend. Unfortunately I'm a bit busy working on a genetics research paper now so it'll take a bit, but I'll do my damnedest to get to it this weekend. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:42, April 21, 2017 (UTC)


 * I'm just going to assume the dialogue is what you're planning to put in and skip over any errors in the plot outline itself as they likely won't make their way over to the story itself.


 * Punctuation: Remember that periods should only be used in dialogue if it it the end of a sentence, otherwise you use a comma. "“Hello.” I said.", “Well, I’m feeling a little better but I’m still a bit sore.” I replied.", "“Oh well don’t worry. You won’t be feeling that way for much longer.” Becky chuckled."", etc.


 * Punctuation cont.: "The protagonist says(comma or colon missing) "That's a lot of work for someone's first day, isn't it?"", "Becky replies with(comma or colon missing) "Well, when you're working on a farm, you gotta put the hours in."", etc.


 * Wording: "Why, he (is) one of our best farmhands!" There are some other wording issues, but since they're in the outline, I don't think they'll cross over into the story.


 * Story: "Roy becomes angrier and says, “No no no! I can’t let you do any more work for today!” The protagonist still refuses and Roy runs towards them. The protagonist takes out their pocket knife and points it at Roy." This seems like a massive escalation that is going to need quite a lot of fleshing out for the scene not to feel like a massive jump. This is especially true since the protagonist threatens someone with a knife and they call a day later as if nothing is wrong.


 * Story: "A couple of days later, they get a response, saying that they like the protagonist's resume and that they can start any time they want." You might want them to do a phone interview or something before giving them the job to make it a bit more realistic.


 * Story: "he's afraid that Zack might spread rabies it could’ve gotten from the coyote attack to the others, despite getting treatment. The protagonist says that Zack doesn't have rabies since he's not foaming out the mouth." Rabies isn't instant-onset so the protagonist can't know if Zack is infected or not. It actually has a period where no symptoms manifest until a few weeks after infection. Additional fun fact, rabies is almost always fatal once symptoms manifest as the damage has been done.


 * Story: The twist ("They find out that the grave belongs to Lorenzo Miller, who, according to the epitaph was a, “Hard Working Boy and Loveable Stepson.”(.)") needs quite a bit of work as there really isn't much foreshadowing or hint-dropping in the story. If you're looking for it to have this effect on the protagonists: "Roy tells them to hand over their tool and pays them for the work they did that day. Roy says goodbye and the protagonist does the same. Once they are far enough away from Roy, they run as fast as they can and they eventually arrive at the house. They hop on their bike and pedal away from the farm." you might want to add a bit more to drive home the horror of the situation. I would recommend listening to Tom Waits' "Phantom 309" as it has a similar twist but is a bit more effective with its ending.


 * Story end: The main issue I see is that there's a lot happening in the story before any real horror elements being. The first real scene that seemed like you were going for a horror/ghost story was six pages in. It might be difficult to hold an audience's attention for that long without protagonist foreshadowing, scene setting, or ominous events occurring. This is especially problematic as this is six pages in to the outline which means it'll likely be longer than that. Finally, the ending needs quite a bit of work as it doesn't really feel like there's any payoff for the protagonist to learn that Lorenzo is a ghost. There isn't a lot of interaction with him and their isn't a lot of backstory into how Lorenzo died. I hope that's enough for you to get some ideas when it comes to writing and revising the plot some. Have a good one. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 15:05, April 22, 2017 (UTC)


 * Sounds good, but I might give a little more before that event at the end to indicate not all may be right around the farm. As for the phone call interview, I remember when I sold some of my stuff on Craigslist I made sure to talk to the person beforehand to get a feel for what I was getting myself into. I just thought I'd point out the mention about rabies for adding a little basis to the story. Best of luck with editing and writing. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:04, April 22, 2017 (UTC)


 * Alright, that looks good so far. Feel free to send me a link once your story is getting closer to completion if you're looking for more feedback. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:40, April 22, 2017 (UTC)

AAAAHHHH!!!!! I stepped on a thumb tax!!!
I don't know why you posted all that since I said I wasn't interested in the story at all, but I will give some feedback this time. I feel that scene makes Yuki look like a terrible person. I'd even go so far as to call her a psychopath. I think it would be better to change the scene entirely. If she feels the need to lie, have her tell a lie that isn't so appalling.

That's good! Hopefully it'll get a lot of attention.

Did you hear about the Pokemon episode that premiered a couple weeks ago? I involved Litten and Stoutland, and some are calling it the saddest Pokemon episode ever made. Raidra (talk) 23:28, April 21, 2017 (UTC)

Greetings
Well, hello there, light one. As I doubt the chance of a polite formality passing on to a site of this format, may I inquire the purpose of your greeting?

I'm the Hand of God. The one where he holds the spear 05:01, April 23, 2017 (UTC)

I see. So I am the equivalent of the last edible food in the fridge when you're hungry and ran out of every other option, is that correct?

Very well, what particular subject would you like to touch? I'm fairly well-versed in most fields, save for a select few.

I'm the Hand of God. The one where he holds the spear 09:36, April 23, 2017 (UTC)


 * Not gonna lie, the question was meant to provoke a reaction. I appreciate the direct attitude.


 * Hmm, I believe the second one is a remake of the first one (as the first has been removed), though I'm not sure why. I have somewhat mixed opinions about the list, partly because I have some sort of aversion to chain-link/don't read this or else type of story. Though I have to say that I'm fascinated by the ritualistic and gory trends among all of them. Ghost/demons are also a trend, but at least that can be somewhat attributed to Japanese mythology (ghosts for everything). Also, why does everyone, dead or alive, in these legends seems to be such an asshole? What I was surprised by was finding out what "Tomino's hell" story was about (I was never curious to read it and assumed it was somewhat similar to In Torment). Do you have any favourites?


 * I'm the Hand of God. The one where he holds the spear 14:46, April 24, 2017 (UTC)

Hiyo!
Hiii! I've been a bit sidetracked lately (or focused, depending on interpretation XD). I got back into playing Pokemon because of you and Raidra. Finally finished my Alpha Sapphire run that I started two years ago (had quit after 3rd gym). I had blast, I guess I just needed a break because Pokemon games were coming out too fast. I've also been playing The Witcher 3, reading Star Wars Thrawn, and writing a lot - a whole lot. Ikari has reached 20,000 words (80 pages) and Artificial Friendship - I started it last month - has reached 12,000 words.

You seem to really like sheep :D I'll finish reading over the outline later before commenting on it, seems good so far *thumbs up*. I like your vampire lore, particularly the sunscreen, steak, and garlic. I was trying to do a vampire story with a twist on it, but couldn't get it to work (tried twice, will try again later on). Buckle up!  I'm going to be popular  00:06, April 24, 2017 (UTC)


 * Maybe Hollywood just has baaaaaaad taste (I'll see myself out).


 * I think it's written and reads good. I haven't completely looked over the outline yet, so the question I am about to ask might make me look stupid (and maybe even snobby), but I ask it because I care: "Are the job searching scenes necessary?" What I mean is, do you feel that they will be interesting, add to the story, and need to be shown? I think it could be made to work well - showing job hunting - but it might hurt the pacing of the story and be something the average reader won't want to see. Stephen King once mentioned something about how he had a character in one of his books do volunteer work and wrote tons of pages on it, and then when he's wife was reading it she turned to him and basically said, "What's this add to the story? Yeah, it shows he's a good person, but aren't there other ways to show that?" And she was right and he ended up cutting it out and just mentioned it in a sentence or two because there were other ways to show his character was a good person and more interesting things to cover.


 * I'm not saying you can't make it interesting, you totally can and might. I just wanted to bring that up and get you thinking about whether or not the story would be stronger showing the job hunting or mentioning it in passing (like a sentence or two). I'm cool with whichever you choose and want you to write your story however you want to, but I just felt the need to bring that up.


 * Ignoring all that, I'd say a paper ad or channel ad and build off the point that the protagonist chose to look in those places for a job because their computer sucks/is so slow. Buckle up!  I'm going to be popular  09:23, April 25, 2017 (UTC)

The Purge
I apologize for the delay; I've just felt tired the last couple of days. I'm glad you removed that part because, like you said, it overstepped some boundaries. Incidentally, I recently saw a video asking if Patrick on SpongeBob SquarePants is a psychopath. I have to say they made some good points in arguing that he was.

EDDY used ANIME PHYSICS on VENDING MACHINE! It's super-effective! Opposing VENDING MACHINE fainted! X-D Thankfully it still had a better ending than efforts to mess with vending machines in the real world- https://www.thoughtco.com/are-vending-machines-more-deadly-than-sharks-3970604. Raidra (talk) 14:01, April 24, 2017 (UTC)
 * I thought I said I wasn't interested in anything related to the Yuki story. Your previous message even said, "I promise that this will be the last message that dicusses this topic." Raidra (talk) 20:07, April 24, 2017 (UTC)

Pokemon Sob and Mourn
Thank you, I appreciate that. I was impressed that they did such a serious issue. Someone commented that people had talked about how childish the new series was, so a lot of people were surprised. I know one of the memorable scenes was Bewear comforting Meowth. It would be nice if they showed Team Rocket members as three-dimensional more often.

I recently found a YouTube channel with episodes of the Johto series. Things were simpler then because that was before Ash got in the rut the writers insist on putting him in. As I've said before, it's a shame that all those Pokemon are sitting around at Professor Oak's doing nothing of interest.

I like the Sunny Hill Farms draft so far. I'll have to get back to you on the classified vs. Monster question, though, because I don't think that there's a clear answer. I mean, the protagonist would have a reason for picking one over the other, so the question requires some thought. Raidra (talk) 21:33, April 24, 2017 (UTC)

Pokemon See and Saw
That's a nice thought. I'm glad the Pokemon have somewhere to go other than the PC boxes, and from now on I'm going to imagine the Pokemon at the Oak Ranch having fun adventures. Shoot, that's just fan-fiction waiting to happen.

I like the new paragraph very much because it's so realistic. It's irritating how it seems like the majority of ads say "Experience required" or something similar. My aunt has noted that a lot of places are contradictory, noting that the employers say they'll only hire people with experience, but people can't get experience unless they're hired! Anyway, it also answers the question of why they went on Craigslist. Incidentally, YouTuber Mr. Nightmare has a few videos of Craigslist horror stories if you ever want to check them out. Raidra (talk) 00:41, April 26, 2017 (UTC)

Look out, those rocks are armed!
Awww, that was really sweet! I also like the anime reference. Interestingly enough I recently thought, "What if the anime isn't portraying the real Pokemon world? What if it's just portraying an in-universe anime/fan-fiction? What if it's really just an anime within an anime?" Pokemonception?

I really enjoyed the new draft. I thought it was funny that Earl tried punching the stain out, and after watching JohneAwesome's Let's Play videos for Pokemon Gold I can appreciate the references even more (such as not being allowed into Kanto without the badges, and the guards at the buildings). I also realized that the scene with the Onix (with Emily, not the flashback) is even scarier than it first appears. Why? Because Emily and Eddy didn't do anything. The Onix was clearly disturbed from something that had happened, and they just had the misfortune of being there when they were. I did notice an issue, though. First you say the Geodude punched the bike into dust, and then you say Officer Jenny threw the bike into the lake. You should probably change it from "pile of dust" to "pile of scrap metal" or something to that effect.

I'd have to do research, but my guess is that the term existed before the book, but the book popularized it. Raidra (talk) 00:03, April 28, 2017 (UTC)

Poke-TV
So here's what's on the bike's playlist for today- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0ULWNNrE6b8. (WARNING: Song is infectiously catchy)

That makes a lot of sense. It would be fun to imagine the characters as actors behind the scenes giving their thoughts on the plotlines and fan reactions. I really like your idea for Jenny's backstory. It makes sense and is also realistic (since there are people who say they were inspired to enter one field or another by a book, movie, etc.). It's also nice to see that she wants to help people.

Thank you. So she was imagining that Geodude wrecked her bike? That makes sense since she was imagining a couple other scenarios too. By the way, mentioning groups of Pokemon made me wonder if they have names for collectives like animals do. You know- a bevy of quail, a murder of crows, a troop of monkeys, etc. For instance, do they have a quarry of Geodude, a nuzzle of Dedenne, etc. I guess it's up to the fan's imagination.

That's funny. Is that a reference to the number of Magikarp in the game? Of course, you'll have to have her make a remark about the Magikarp salesman. Raidra (talk) 14:21, April 29, 2017 (UTC)

A reference for references
Oh, okay. I hadn't heard of that, but that's a funny clip! Nope, nothing suspicious looking about that student!

Wow. That first one (the one you talked about) was a piece of work, the last one had a very good point, and the middle ones... I don't get what was with the middle ones. All I know is some guy was ranting for some reason and then he broke someone's laptop. ~shrugs while the theme for Curb Your Enthusiasm plays~ Yeah, how'd that work out for you, player? "I thought it was hilarious because it kind of sums up how some people react to criticism, especially some people here on this wiki." Yep! It's really pathetic. I don't remember if I ever mentioned this, but I have an Associate's Degree in Fine & Performing Arts from Sinclair Community College. Many of the classes had times when our works would be displayed in front of the whole class, either individually or collectively, and critiqued. If someone had acted like that hothead, no one would have spoken to them again because they would have lost any respect anyone might have had for them. This reminds me too of a couple videos I came across recently. I Hate Everything did a video about people on Deviantart. Sometime later he posted another video talking about how crybabies at Deviantart had falsely accused him of being a bigoted bully because he criticized someone's bizarre fan art. Not only were these hateful crybabies being hypocrites (because they were being threatening and bullying in response to someone merely giving an opinion), but they made things worse because the incident publicized the name of the original artist and brought more criticism. I usually don't read the comments section, but the second video had someone note, "The cruelest thing you can do to an artist is tell them their work is perfect when it isn't.﻿"

I'm confused as to whether she's saying, "Catch me outside," or "Cash me outside," because I've heard people use both when referring to her. I had never heard of either phrase (and I have no idea where it comes from), but someone on a show was kind enough to provide the meaning, which was basically "Come meet me outside so we can settle this." What, is she too "cool" to speak intelligibly? What happened to saying, "Why don't we go outside and settle this?" It's irritating when people insist in talking in vague slang instead of basic English, and then get angry when people don't understand what they're saying. There was some comedian who talked about meeting some teenager who wore his pants down low and greeted him with "'Sup!" It took the comedian a while to figure out he was saying, "What's up?" and when he did he replied, "Since you're too lazy to pull your pants up, I should have known you'd be too lazy to form an actual sentence." I really don't get why the audience cheered, but someone should do that brat a favor and inform her the audience is laughing at her, not with her. Raidra (talk) 19:59, April 30, 2017 (UTC)

H.R. Hufflepuff
From what I read Hufflepuff sounds cool. It's a shame they're overlooked. If you decide to pursue it I'd definitely like to read it.

I don't know if you saw this, but Blameitonjorge did a whole video on the strange children's shows created by Sid and Marty Krofft (most known for H.R. Pufnstuf). There was one that showed someone flying through the air (I want to say they were in a flying car), and the makers of the video inserted a clip of someone singing, "(Bleep) this (bleep), I'm out!"

"So the premise behind Fred focuses on a six year old named Fred Figglehorn (played by a really high pitched teenager)..." Wait, Fred was supposed to be six!? Wow. That answers one or two questions and raises so many more. Yeah, I don't get why Fred was popular in the first place. I also don't get why they gave that actor another show after his popularity had already waned. One of my nominees on that worst comedy blog read, "Marvin Marvin- The guy who did Fred later starred in this sitcom about an alien trying to blend into Earth culture, and every scene I saw (while channel surfing or in commercials) was pointless and devoid of humor. One episode involved a body part that might explode, and one piece of 'humor' involved the alien knowing nothing about the names of colors. Huh? One preview had Marvin having trouble with his 'smelly button', a defense mechanism that caused stinking smoke to come from his belly button. Wait, you have enough of an idea of what a belly button is that you can have that play on words, but you don't know what the color red is?" In any case, I like your Winnie the Pooh comparison. You need either characters the audience can relate too and identify with and/or characters the audience can laugh at. You can't have a character who's completely annoying and expect people to root for them.

I checked my notes and the comedian's name is Lenny Clarke. I like to keep track of comedians I think had funny routines. The only problem is I only write brief notes, so sometimes I see something like "two brothers playing Ping-Pong on sidewalk" and wonder, "What was this routine?" Raidra (talk) 20:51, May 2, 2017 (UTC)

Honest Trailer Park
Before I started watching I jokingly thought, "Did they really mean to do an honest trailer for La La Land, or was it actually supposed to be for Moonlight?" Then I watched and discovered they had beaten me to the joke. In any case, that was hilarious! X-D

It's coming right along, isn't it? I just realized that if we wanted, we could use the milestone reviews as an excuse to eat cake and ice cream. "Oh, we finished season three! We might as well celebrate! ~winks~"

That's an interesting inspiration for a creepypasta. The bizarreness of Sid and Marty Krofft- the legend lives on!

I can imagine them doing that! What do you want to bet there were some non-Asians complaining about the episode being offensive (while actual Asians either didn't mind or thought it was funny)? Either last night or this morning I realized something about I Hate Everything, which is that the fellow's name is I Hate Everything. What in blazes makes fanatics think he won't express dislike for whatever they're obsessed with? The channel isn't called "I Hate Everything with the Exception of Whatever It Is You're Madly Obsessed With and Love More than the Air You Breathe Because My Sole Purpose in Life Is to Suck Up to You." Raidra (talk) 19:14, May 3, 2017 (UTC)

Beep Beep
Hiiiiiiiii! I wanted to check in and let you know that I'll read your last two messages and get back to giving you feedback on them either this weekend or next week. Sorry for the late replies, I've a lot on my plate and the vegetables keep edging their way over, so I am mostly finishing them first >.> Sorry if I made you feel worried! Buckle up!  I'm going to be popular  02:01, May 5, 2017 (UTC)


 * You been going to a campus or doing classes online? I hope you have been going in person, campus's are fun to go to :D I have no idea beyond Wattpad, but the chances of getting replies/reads there are rather slim (at least in my experience). There are definitely sites out there though, some people really love romance stuff. It depends for me. I tend to like RomComs. Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  06:11, May 7, 2017 (UTC)


 * Okay, I read your outlines from April 26th and May 2nd! Firstly, have you watched Welcome to the NHK? I swear there was a program called New Start there, but I don't remember for sure because it's been forever since I watched it XD So, I've got some gaps in the story in terms of what I've received (got parts 1-5 and parts 10-13) that's okay though, I just want you to know that some of this is a bit out of context to me so my feedback might not make sense in spots.


 * I think the Pokemon dream feels out of place and I think Azumi buying what Yuki tells her is a bit too convenient. Maybe you could have someone who knows the dude that lives there show up and be like, "Who is that?" to Azumi and have Azumi respond, "Such and such's sister." Then dude could go, "Such and such has no sister!" Then maybe do a chase scene through the house but have Yuki slip away? Perhaps chase scenes could be a reoccurring gag? I think it's good though and like what you have. Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  19:08, May 8, 2017 (UTC)


 * Oh, it just felt out of place, a bit forced to me is all. What you have now, that sounds better to me! Good work :D I've only skimmed the outline as I am in a hurry, so I'll leave you more in depth feedback on it later (real feedback).


 * As I told Raidra: Please do not open any email attachments, visit any new links, launch any executables. There is a bad computer worm going around, allegedly it is an NSA Cyberweapon which leaked and has been improved upon, it's struck at least 99 countries. I am going to be absent from the internet for a few days, while this gets sorted. It has hit China's manufacturing hard, England's hospitals (many patients are going to die now as hospital equipment is malfunctioning/inaccessible), and Russia seems to have gotten it the worst. Madagascar has flat out closed off their internet port. I know this sounds like a sci-fi joke, but I am dead serious: Although I may be overestimating it, I'd rather play it safe.  Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  23:36, May 12, 2017 (UTC)


 * I love buffalo chicken pizza! Last year I actually asked for pizza instead of cake XD I'm glad!


 * First I've heard of it, so thank you for not spoiling :3 I tend to like that pricing model, hate it with AAA games though. Those should always be a one time payment and full release at launch (save for expansions) in my eyes.


 * I just got an idea that I wanted to pitch to you for your RomCom. You know how she's wronging a bunch of people right now? Hotel Lady and Apartment Guy? Well, what if at the end of the story she enters a room for something, turns on the light to see and they are all there to confront her? I think that'd make for a funny and shocking scene. Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing what her and Kathy get into to! Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  22:55, May 16, 2017 (UTC)

Penguin Love
Aw, that is so cute! "There she is! The penguin of my dreams!" <3

The thing about Speedy Gonzales is he has a lot of positive attributes, such as being fast, smart, helpful, and charming. I can only think of one or two episodes that portrayed him with any negative qualities. So basically they were refusing to show a character that's a positive representation of a group of people, and thus a beloved character among that group of people, while claiming to be thinking of the feelings of that group of people. "Before you go around claiming that something is offensive to a group of people, make sure that the group in question is actually offended by it." That's exactly right! I would add the reverse is true as well- do your research before creating a character you claim is supportive of/representative of a group of people. Over the years there have been comic book companies and whatnot creating characters that are supposed to appeal to one group or another, and the characters turn out to be pandering & misguided at best and jaw-droppingly offensive at worst. I roll my eyes in disbelief and disgust to see some of these "girl power" characters out there.

Okay. By the way, I found this video last night and it made me laugh out loud. Raidra (talk) 03:09, May 5, 2017 (UTC)

One token, please
"Okay, we have a new character! He's black/Hispanic/gay/whatever." "All right. What's the backstory?" "Who needs a backstory? We don't need to establish the character or anything! He's black/Hispanic/gay/whatever!  People will eat this right up!" ~cut to controversy, angry fan reaction, accusations of stereotyping and pandering, and the cancellation of the title within a year~

I actually saw part of the segment with Julia while flipping through the channels one night. It was on a PBS station at 11:00 on a Sunday (because 11 PM is when the kiddies are watching TV, apparently). It may not have shown a lot about her character, but some parts shone through. For instance, she laughed about how small Big Bird looked when looking down from a balcony, so that shows a sense of humor and an appreciation for irony. I thought the segment was great because it showed that someone may be different than you, but you can still be great friends if you just take the time to get to know them. In my comics I have a number of characters with mental conditions as well as some physical handicaps, and I like to think I do a good job. Like you say, you have to portray things realistically. Raidra (talk) 15:49, May 6, 2017 (UTC)


 * Oh, here's another thing. Sometimes I think writers make bad characters minorities on purpose/insert minorities into a bad story just so they can play the race card, the gay card, or whatever if people criticize the comic/movie/whatever.  "You don't like our poorly-written story?  Oh, then you're racist/homophobic/sexist/etc.!"  Maybe that's just me being paranoid, but if that does happen, then that's low.
 * By the way, I can post a list of my heroes with disabilities/conditions if you'd like. Raidra (talk) 20:36, May 6, 2017 (UTC)

Young Frankly I Think They Were Drunk
That’s interesting because the other day we went to a performance of Sister Act the musical. From what I’ve seen of the movie it was very different (For instance, the musical was set in 1978 Philadelphia), but I thought it was great. My only complaint was that the strong singing voices led to some every powerful notes. I had to rub my ear from time to time. Thankfully the people sitting close to us weren’t a problem. One time we attended a show (which turned out not to be great) and there was a woman somewhere laughing uproariously at just about everything. I wonder if she were drunk. What's also interesting is I thought about Mel Brooks earlier today. I saw an inspirational quote reading, "Some days you won't have a song in your heart. Sing anyway," and I thought of that scene from Blazing Saddle where, in the midst of the big fight, the cabaret singer and the Nazis were singing together.

Okay, here we go! It’s a long list since I have a lot of characters. Keep in mind these are all heroes and their allies. I don’t like media that portrays only villains as having problems because we all do. Keep in mind that some of these are humans and some are aliens and monsters. I can give further explanation if needed.
 * Super Creature- occasionally experiences doubt and pain (which may include the feeling he kills everyone he loves by loving them), becomes depressed the first week of August as he mourns the death of his planet, addicted to vomiting for a time
 * Yatar- farsightedness
 * The Submarine- formerly inferiority complex
 * The Flying Fox- post-traumatic stress disorder, suffered broken hand
 * Greased Lightning- lost right hand (now wears prosthetic)
 * The Blue Battler- has battled personal demons (including past suicidal thoughts), suffered broken arm
 * Green Beam- slight nervousness when diving underwater (He was diving underwater when all life on his planet was ended)
 * Metamorpha- withered right wing (She was the first handicapped leaguer)
 * Othello- epilepsy
 * Blue Thunderbolt- recovering oladum (heroin) addict (Oladum is the name for heroin on his planet)
 * Manes- slashed right ankle (making it hard to walk), aversion to blood, meat, and anything resembling blood or bloody tissue
 * Road Burner- increased susceptibility to hypnosis (making him more susceptible to mind control)
 * Affright- nearly raped as a child, formerly suffered fits of rage
 * Crackerjack- recovering alcoholic
 * Ultra Kate and Karate Kate- post-traumatic stress disorder
 * The White Tigress- suffers bouts of loneliness
 * The Daring Dhole- dyslexia, severe allergies to most perfumes
 * Erland Guthrie- needs cane
 * Chrome Claws- lost right hand (now wears prosthetic), formerly suffered emotional problems
 * Lunafloris- deafness
 * Suggestion- epilepsy
 * Moonlight- formerly a werehyena
 * Kayla Dimera- slight deafness in left ear, needs reading glasses, breathing problems, sometimes suffers bouts of fear (marked by visions of The Fear Man) with occasional vomiting, battled nominal aphasia (anomic aphasia or anomia), nearly went mad
 * Goblin Robin- recovering drug addict
 * The Gum-Chewing Vampiress- recovering blood and nicotine addict (She was The Chain-Smoking Vampiress before her reformation)
 * Dusk (†)- suffered painful injuries leading to meperidine (Demerol) addiction
 * Gang-Router- suffered spinal injury, formerly suffered minor guilt complex
 * Ki- confidence problems and other emotional issues, fear of women (gynephobia)
 * Hustle- sensitivity to cold, recovering drug user, increased urination
 * Night Raven- stutter, born without laser vision
 * Morning Star- born with light powers instead of darkness powers, mostly neglected by family
 * Ringdove- physical ailments
 * Posterity- psychosomatic symptoms, insomnia
 * Black Betsy- recovering gambling addict
 * John 11- nervous breakdown (He referred to it as a “continuous fit of nerves”)
 * The Black Stag- loses his antlers each winter
 * Sandstorm- survived bout of leprosy which cost her parts of her fingers, toes, and face
 * Intensity- oppositional defiant disorder, non-healing wound and discolored veins
 * The Vower- formerly tortured by guilt
 * Nightwalker- insomnia
 * Attendant- nervous tics, possible autism
 * Grief- formerly self-cutting due to emotional issues
 * Rebetiko- lost left leg (now wears prosthetic)
 * Virus 2.0- emotional problems stemming from Dwayne’s torture
 * Krampus- autism
 * Receiver (†)- television was formerly his reality
 * Blur- sometimes suffers from self-doubt, battled depersonalization
 * The Endurance- slight crack in skull, manic-depression (bipolar disorder)
 * Quixote- brain damage from head injury and nerve gas exposure causes him to hallucinate
 * Izanagi- recovering blood addict (He’s based on the kappa of Japanese folklore)
 * Karoc- emotional problems including post-traumatic stress disorder and a fear of Joseph Mascolo (JosephMascolophobia), can’t teleport
 * Reed Chanley- nightmares
 * Radar- insomnia
 * Coe Rage- lost left eye (now wears eyepatch)
 * Scion- anger issues, night terrors, dyslexia
 * Revenant- emotional problems stemming from his torture and indoctrination by Manasseh
 * Liberator- HIV+
 * Lemon Yellow- terribly wounded during combat
 * Ioannis- epilepsy, formerly emotional problems
 * Matt- mentally handicapped (mental retardation, otherwise known as developmental disability and intellectual impairment)
 * Damon- born with virtually nothing below his rib cage
 * B-Metal- formerly self-hatred, depression, and over-the-counter drug addiction
 * Claude- problem paying attention
 * Hope- muteness
 * Ishmael- fear of fire (pyrophobia) and extreme cold (cryophobia) (He’s a plant creature, like Bellsprout)
 * Halke- emotional problems, formerly obsession leading to self-destructive behavior
 * Green Lamp- nightmares and other problems
 * Sadira- recovering cocaine, heroin, and methamphetamine addict
 * Remnant- emotional problems, bouts of fever sickness
 * Twiggy Pop- recovering drug addict and self-cutter
 * Juventino- fear of fire (pyrophobia) and extreme cold (cryophobia) (Same as Ishmael)
 * Giduraj- unstable personality sometimes causes him to go on rampages
 * Pajură- headaches
 * Purple Cloak- muteness
 * Torchbearer- sleep problems
 * Dr. Feldman (†)- degenerative neurological condition leading to insanity and death
 * Fetish (†)- emotional problems, abused by captors
 * Missy Mester- emotional problems
 * Kent Vimms- emotional problems
 * Blare- emotional problems stemming from Master Skull’s indoctrination
 * Foam- recovering steroid and performance-enhancing drug addict
 * Pendulum- suffered a breakdown and expressed suicidal thoughts as a result of negative neurological and psychological side-effects from overusing his powers
 * Mizukage- needs eyeglasses due to poor eyesight
 * Cinder- trust issues
 * Voyeur- insomnia
 * Nonentity-Dangerous behaviors such as starving himself or allowing himself to be poisoned, has abused nitrous oxide (laughing gas)
 * Devotee- emotional issues including post-traumatic stress disorder
 * Pathos- insomnia and nightmares
 * Sacrifice- only has one kidney
 * Grave- badly burned, resulting in scars as well as nightmares and other problems
 * Torrent- emotional problems
 * Iwazaru- asthma
 * The Ill Man- constant nausea with occasional vomiting
 * White Tiger II- past suicidal thoughts
 * Dongjeong (Gigye and Doduk)- mental issues as such compulsion for reckless behavior and obsession
 * Defiance- slightly premature and delivered by emergency C-section due to mother becoming fatally wounded at nearly nine months, oppositional defiant disorder
 * Sarazak- anger issues, emotional problems
 * Roseate Brier- emotional problems
 * Nighthawk- born without wings
 * Tamas- emotional problems, nightmares
 * Rico- recovering drug addict
 * Demon- has bullet lodged in his brain from being shot in the head
 * Gifted- muteness
 * Darklash- recovering from bout of madness caused by her darkness powers
 * The Bride of Christ- emotional problems
 * The Pathetic Loon- hebephrenia

You're right; they've done a good job over the years. I wish more children's shows respected the intelligence of their audience.

Yeah, a bad beginning sets a bad tone for the rest of the story. The odds are good the reader/viewer/listener is going to be wondering, “What the blazes was that about?” way into the story. Raidra (talk) 19:43, May 7, 2017 (UTC)

List and shout
It's hard to say because I kept having to update it. I just finished it recently.

Have you ever heard of the cartoon Tiny Toon Adventures? There was a movie/multi-part episode showing things they did on their summer vacation. One of them was roped into seeing a movie, but her date kept loudly shouting plot spoilers. "Here's where he thinks there's a skunk, but instead it's just the smelly ol' state trooper!!" "Shhhh!" "See!?! Smelly ol' state trooper!!!" "Shhhh!!"

There was actually an incident a couple years ago in which a guy shot and killed someone for talking on their cell phone during a movie. I seem to remember them saying the shooter was a retired police officer, so maybe he had some mental issues related to the stress of his job (not an excuse, just a thought). On a lighter note, a couple years back Carrie Fisher was performing her one-woman show and some guy was either talking on his cell phone or just letting it ring and ring. Carrie stopped right in the middle of her show and chewed the guy out in front of everybody. Oh, Carrie, you were so awesome! Raidra (talk) 14:37, May 9, 2017 (UTC)

Captain Crunchtime
Woo-hoo! I hope everything went well with your final projects. So Monday will be a combination birthday and first day of summer break, huh? Sweet!

I love the character studies. :-D It's cool how detailed they are and how much thought you put into them (like Jasmine also being a Contest winner). The fact that Jasmine hates noises but is a Steel-type user knows how much she loves her Pokemon. I saw a Let's Play video JohneAwesome did for Pokemon Gold, and he noted that Jasmine was the only female Gym Leader in the game who actually did what she was supposed to. Whitney had a tantrum after losing and Clair made you take on a whole new challenge before giving up the badge, but Jasmine just says, "You beat me fair and square, so here you go!"

As research for a project I once looked up online classified ads from Cincinnati. There was one saying that a man was seeking a female roommate. I thought, "That seems suspicious..." and then I saw the guy say he'd accept cooking and cleaning in lieu of rent. I thought, "Well now my suspicions are completely different!" An arrangement like that could work if the people had good character, though. You shouldn't have someone in the household lording over you. Anywho, I like what you have so far. My suggestion is for the narrator to note that they'd heard some horror stories about Craigslist, but they figured that it was worth a shot, and that surely those horrible incidents were in the minority. It may seem a little cliched to say, "I'd heard stories, but decided to go there anyway," but if you don't mention the horror stories people are likely to say, "Well, hadn't this person heard the horror stories?" I think it's better to address it and also realistic (since there are still plenty of people who use Craigslist despite horrible incidents which have occurred).

In a galaxy far, far away... interrupting cell phone calls are still considered rude. Some things are universal.

I agree with your mom; that is one dumb line. "How did you become captain?" "Well, I enlisted after graduating from community college, and I proceeded to graduate from the Naval Academy in Annapolis. After serving some time aboard an aircraft carrier and some aboard a submarine I advanced through the ranks. Oh, and I was late for everything." That meme of Jackie Chan looking confused comes to mind. Speaking of game-related movies- http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Dorkpool/Tetris:_The_Movie. Raidra (talk) 14:58, May 12, 2017 (UTC)

Out of Ideas: The Trilogy
I think your ideas would be the best ways to do it. I did some research, and they're now claiming it will be part of a trilogy. Um... what? However, I've heard so little talk about the Tetris movie(s) that I'm starting to wonder if the movie will be one of these "development hell" type deals. Here's an article explaining what I'm talking about.

That reminds me of Earl Weaver. He was the manager of the Baltimore Orioles for a number of years, and I think he has the record for being ejected from games (for arguing with the umpires). I don't know a lot about him, but supposedly he said that his tombstone should say, "Here lies the sorest loser that ever lived." He passed away a few years ago, but I don't know if they actually put that or not. I remember Pippi Longstocking! We used to watch movies in elementary school sometimes. The only things I remember were her braids and her being free-spirited. There was also a scene in which she dipped her face into a cake. Why? I don't know. Maybe you could have a scene with Clefairy eating cake (either a victory cake or a sympathy cake depending on how Whitney's team did).

Poor Eddy has been wrecking a lot of machines lately, but he means well. Kuni seems a little awkward dealing with people. I like the shirt with Bulbasaur as number one. That's a pretty clever reference.

Congratulations to your brother, though I agree that seems awfully early to begin something like that. I don't think my graduation was that early. One thing I do remember was someone passing out cherry-flavored cigars to anyone who wanted one. You know what happens when you take a stinky cigar and add cherry flavor? You get a stinky cigar with notes of cherry. The guy sitting next to me took one, so I had to put up with the smell, but he was a nice guy, so it wasn't so bad.

I understand you needing to think about it because, like you said, it could go either way. Maybe she's just being really petty and demanding by wanting challengers to undergo an extra challenge, but then again maybe she pushes people hard because she knows they can handle it & wants to help them grow. Oh, I just had a thought- what if she's like Gordon Ramsey? Raidra (talk) 21:57, May 13, 2017 (UTC)

You don't microwave a Pokeblock!
~laughs at Mudbray joke~ I saw a segment in which this restaurant made good food, but instead of serving it fresh, they froze it for weeks and then heated it up in the microwave before serving it. Ramsey asked if there was anything that wasn't microwaved and someone told him, "The salad." I don't remember the full quote, but Gordon replied something like, "'The salad'? Well, of course you don't microwave a salad!!"

I know all about that. Some nights I get a message before I go to bed, but I'm so tired that it has to wait until later. I prefer to be mentally alert when I respond to messages and not like this or this.

That makes sense. I re-watched a video with someone's choices for the top five worst Pokemon battles in the anime, and I noticed 4 out of 5, or eighty percent of the examples, were from the BW series (The fifth was the aforementioned Tate and Liza battle). I thought, "Okay, now I can see why people didn't like this." Before I wondered, "Well, Ash caught more Pokemon, so he's competent with that again; why are people complaining?" Now I see it. One of the dumbest things was a trainer named Cameron sending a Grass-Steel type against a Fire-Fighting type, and then sending a Water-Flying type against an Electric type. There... There are no words. It's a shame that they had interesting Pokemon and wasted them on such terrible battles. Whether you have an awesome scene or a stupid scene, you should have someone comment on how some episode are cool and some are terrible.

Maybe Bugsy is a Charlie Brown fan. (In case you didn't get the comment, here's an explanation) Incidentally, the world of art and literature has had a number of women who posed as men (and vice-versa) in order to seem more reputable. People were more likely to take a novel/painting seriously if they thought a man had created it, and they were more likely to think a romance was tender and romantic if they thought a woman had written it.

Speaking of memes, I just found out about the origin of "We've got to have... money," earlier today. Raidra (talk) 02:56, May 15, 2017 (UTC)
 * Oh, before I go, I know it's a little early, but happy birthday! :-D Raidra (talk) 02:56, May 15, 2017 (UTC)

Happy Birthday
Happy Birthday! The plot outline looks good (seems same to what I read before until the end, minus dream sequence). I like how you had someone get suspicious and trap her! What will she do next XD Buckle up!   I'm going to be popular  19:04, May 15, 2017 (UTC)

Choose Your Own Insult
Wow, someone put time and effort into that! Mine is, "It's RAAAW, you bloody banana!" Recently I came a scene from a movie called The Stunt Man. The director for the film within the film, Eli Cross, was played by the great Peter O'Toole. In this particular scene, someone yells, "Cut!" before Cross is ready, making him very cross indeed. When he's told that there were only twenty-two seconds left, Cross replies, "In 22 seconds, I could break your f***ing spine! In 22 seconds, I could pinch your head off like a f***ing insect and spin it all over the f***ing pavement! In 22 seconds, I could put 22 bullets inside your ridiculous gut! What I seem unable to do in 22 seconds is to keep you from f***ing up my film!"

I'll have to check that out even if I don't end up downloading/playing it. The name sounds like a happy Disney cartoon, but the description makes it sound frightening. Making the first chapter free reminds me of what they used to call shareware. Companies would send people a disk with the first part of a game series (perhaps with the purchase of a different game). The idea was that you could share the disk with/sell the disk to others. However, the other parts of the game would cost you money (The disk would contain an order form which you could print off and an address to send a check or money order). My dad bought me a disk with a game called Castle of the Winds at ComputerFest one year, and I enjoyed the game so much I later asked for the sequel for Christmas. It's interesting to see shareware continue in a different form.

That reminds of a video that Terrible Writing Advice did- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_rRTHhGVUHg. I think your idea might be an interesting change of perspective. Raidra (talk) 22:29, May 16, 2017 (UTC)

Raidra interrupted
I tried to respond earlier, but the power cut out. :-0 Luckily it wasn't out too long. Gordon certainly makes the world more colorful! :-D

I've seen the rules, but I haven't seen a standards guide. I'd say it's the same as here because I uploaded my stories with little problem. You just have to remember that A) any pictures/videos will have to be uploaded to that wiki too (or else there will be red links instead of images) and B) the list of genres is shorter than the one here, so you'll have to check to see you're not adding any non-existent categories. You could run your story by Jay just to make sure.

They've touched on it once or twice that I've seen, but yeah, he needs to do a romance one. I like your idea, and I think there are a number of ways it can be done. Last night I thought, "What if the corporation is actually doing its best to be environmentally friendly, but someone starts a rumor that they're secretly doing terrible things, and so they get attacked for something they're not actually doing?" It's up to you where the story goes.

What's worse is when proofreading I realized that I had accidentally typed "Eli Stone" instead of "Eli Cross", so I had to go back and change it. Eli Stone was a short-lived ABC show. They promoted it a lot, and then they cancelled it, thus teaching the lesson that you should never become interested in a television show. Wait, there was a Cabin Fever remake?! Cripes, they really are out of ideas... Raidra (talk) 23:49, May 17, 2017 (UTC)

Rothy Raccoon
I just relayed your message to Jay, so hopefully we'll get an answer soon.

For the true triangle lover there's TriangleBob TrianglePants. You gotta love Alan's confusion before and immediately after watching the show. I also thought it was funny when Telly claimed, "It's a mini-series!"

Sounds good! I'd Google the term "run-down farms".

I suddenly thought of something that happened years ago- the red M&M's scare. As recounted on Wikipedia, "Red candies were eliminated in 1976 because of health concerns over the dye amaranth (FD&C Red #2), which was a suspected carcinogen, and were replaced with orange-colored candies. This was done despite the fact that M&M's did not contain the dye; the action was purely to satisfy worried consumers. Red candies were reintroduced ten years later, but they also kept the orange colored M&M's. Paul Hethmon, then a student at University of Tennessee, started the campaign to bring back red M&M's as a joke that would eventually become a worldwide phenomenon." So, yeah, there was panic over a food coloring that they didn't actually use, so they pulled them for years before bringing them back and saying, "Oh, hey, everything's fine now!" Hooray?

I seriously wanted that raccoon to die after a while because he really got to be annoying. That was still better than any version Eli Roth could do. Fun fact- The music that played when the two dinosaurs flew through the air was from The Pumaman. Raidra (talk) 03:38, May 19, 2017 (UTC)
 * Anarchic Operations posted this response about fifteen minutes ago. "That is a bit of a work-in-progress; much like the rest of the wiki at the moment. For now the standards are the same as the CPW until our official quality standards are posted, which shouldn't be too far away. You might have to remind Azumanga that the site isn't complete yet and with a bit of time (hopefully not too long) everything will be in working order. For now they can post their stories if they want, and stress less knowing that we are working to get everything finished." Raidra (talk) 14:56, May 19, 2017 (UTC)

Up through the atmosphere! Up where the air is clear!
I heard about that scene, and what makes is even better is that actor met one of the Mary Poppin actresses. I'll check out the blog later tonight and then I'll share some thoughts.

It may be because I'm a music aficionado, but the first thing I thought of was the Public Enemy album Fear Of A Black Planet. Then you explained and I thought, "Oh, yeah, I've heard of that! That makes more sense!" Nanab Rhubarb pie, yeah! The idea of people in the Pokemon world using the berries and such to use pies and things makes a lot of sense. Don't forget that apricorns can be blended into juice too. Then again, that may be for Pokemon consumption only, like the Rare Candy.

The thing about very special episodes is while some were done well, many others were botched one way or another. For instance, maybe the network insisted that the problem be solved by the end of the episode, and so the writers were forced to end it in an unrealistic way (like an addict seemingly get better right away instead of going through a lengthy recovery process). Maybe the network limited what they could do, so they had to tone down what could have been a powerful storyline. Maybe the writers went about it in a bizarre, awkward, and/or forced way to begin with. Sometimes writers had good intentions, but then there were people who only made "very special episodes" to get attention/praise, which is pathetic. With that being said, I can imagine Emily's trip being like the "Pink Elephants on Parade" number from Dumbo. In case you're wondering what led to this, Dumbo and Timothy drank some water that, unbeknownst to them, the clowns had spilled champagne or something in. This incident is actually what led them to discover that Dumbo could fly since they woke up in a tree the next morning. I can also imagine Emily's Rare Candy experience being along the lines of not taking things that aren't meant for you (such as other people's medicine) and not taking things meant for animals (I've heard people can get sick from eating animal food because it's not processed as well as human food).

What are the odds? I'll have to check that out. By the way, I recently found a Popplio video I thought was funny. The song performed is "A Cruel Angel's Thesis" from Neon Genesis Evangelion. The little I know about the show I know from Anime America poking fun of it, but all you need to know is A) "Cruel Angel's Thesis" is one of the most somber and hauntingly beautiful anime opening themes and B) the ending for NGE was bizarre and confusing, featuring, among other things, a character's giant head on a beach. Raidra (talk) 01:19, May 21, 2017 (UTC)

The Tasty Americans
It is, and it's done well, so you should have plenty of time to see it in a theater. On the opposite end, I recently read some lists of movies that were yanked from theaters because they were so bad. None of them so far have mentioned Cool as Ice, the best bad movie ever. I think I remember hearing it was pulled after three days. Yikes.

That was interesting, and from what I've heard it was realistic. I didn't watch the whole video, though, because I was afraid the guy would follow up something informative by saying something stupid and pretentious. I'm irritated with a lot of people online. Yesterday I saw someone claim that only diabetes can cause "gang green". Yep. They spelled "gangrene" as "gang green". First off, only someone incredibly ignorant would think diabetes is the only thing that can cause gangrene or any condition that would require amputation. Second, gangrene isn't spelled that way! ~rubs temples~

I have a couple questions. One- Wait, they're Miki's son's clothes? I thought Kuni said they were her son's clothes. Second- Out of curiosity, did Kuni yell, "Boo!" because they were going to see Morty, or does she just like yelling, "Boo!" In any case, I think it looks good except for the confusion over whose son's clothes they are. The talk of Eddy rolling on the floor reminds me of games like Pokemon Stadium 2 and Pokemon Colosseum, in which the Pokemon roll around or stagger after getting hit. I've been watching some Let's Play videos of Pokemon XD: Gale of Darkness and thoroughly enjoying them.

Deep down inside, we all have a metallic taste. I can imagine vampires not liking Italians (because of the garlic seasoning). Have you ever read The BFG by Roald Dahl? There's a scene in which they talk about different people tasting different. For instance, Swedish people taste sweet 'n' sour (Sweet 'n' sour/Sweden sour). Raidra (talk) 23:21, May 23, 2017 (UTC)

Team Drunken's blasting off again!
I wondered if that could be the case, but it's vague so far (For instance, saying "My son" instead of "Our son"). I'll have to read the finished chapter and see what I have to say once I see the whole picture. When you only have part of the story, some things aren't immediately clear. I hope that makes sense. My head's touchy right now, so I won't be on long.

~laughs~ Oh, I love it! "Here... have a hair of the Growlithe that bit you there! ~burp!~" By the way, I just found out that there is sake made with venomous snakes, so there's another connection there (I could give you a link to the article, but heads up- it's disturbing). You totally have to put drunk gangsters into Johto Quest!

Garlic is traditionally believed to have medicinal properties (Think of how stores today sell garlic tablets in the vitamin section) and, for some reason, has been believed to be a folk remedy against black magic, so I guess that's why. I once read an article proposing that people my have thought garlic had magical properties because putting a garland of garlic around a child's neck made him less likely to get sick. However, that was because the garland of garlic kept other children away, so that's why they didn't get sick as often.

I like the addition to the character sheet, and it makes me intrigued about what Bugsy's health problems could be. I'm glad he/she has such a good friend. It'll be interesting to see how Emily reacts to the trees too (since they'll probably be like nothing she's seen before, or only seen in books). Raidra (talk) 16:11, May 24, 2017 (UTC)
 * I thought of a couple things while walking my aunt's dog.
 * 1- Getting the badge from Morty is likely to make other Gym Leaders feel more at ease battling Emily, correct? I can imagine them thinking, "She's young, but Morty battled her, so it must be okay."
 * 2- You know how when little kids want to know where babies come from, but their parents think they're too little, they might claim, "Oh, well, the stork brings them."? Maybe you could have Emily think, "Oh, the Pelipper must have brought them a baby."  That's just me, though. Raidra (talk) 21:50, May 24, 2017 (UTC)
 * Here's something I found a few minutes ago- http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Rare_Candy#Trivia, http://www.gameinformer.com/b/features/archive/2012/11/23/pok-233-mon-39-s-burning-questions.aspx. Raidra (talk) 02:44, May 25, 2017 (UTC)

House Rule- Use coasters
I like it so far. It has a realistic feel. I like your approach to setting the scenes. Some writers feel the need to make everything seem super-duper spooky, and those writers get their works featured on Umby's "Deleted Creepypasta Theater".

I like the house rules idea. There are different types of gyms with different settings, so why not have differing rules? I would also add that the challengers get 10-15 minutes to adjust their strategies if they wish to continue (For instance, someone with a number of dog-like Pokemon can use the PC to change their line-up and continue, or they can decide to walk away so they can level up their non-canine Pokemon and try again another day).

I like the new look! The colors and borders really make the headlines pop.

You have a good point. I'd say the stomachache part is still valid though. You know how you can get sick from eating too much of something that's sweet, sour, or spicy? Maybe eating a rare Candy would be like eating a bag of sour Jolly Ranchers chased with some liquid vitamin. That reminds me of a Sesame Street counting book from my childhood. One of the numbers (I want to say number 7) had a smiling guy hungrily looking at several milkshakes. When you pulled the tab the glasses became empty and the guy's face turned green and sickly. That's a combination math lesson and life lesson right there. Raidra (talk) 22:50, May 25, 2017 (UTC)

Release the Gyarados!
I think so too (about both the post-rare candy stomachache and Sesame Street being good at that). It's too bad other shows don't teach life lessons. Maybe then we wouldn't see so much of this.

So the great task was burning down a guy's house? ;-) That was pretty good.  I also think it would've been interesting if the great task had been taking the big book off the shelf.  "Wait, that's the great task!?"  "Well, yeah! The book's really heavy!"

Whoever had the character limit in the original games didn't think it through too thoroughly. I'm sure it's not as big a deal in some Asian countries (in which one symbol can represent an entire word), but it's a failure to look at an international market. It's also been speculated that's why Feraligatr's name is missing a vowel. Poor Feraligatr has to go without because someone said, "Aw, hey, let's just leave it at ten letters!"

I loved Tracy's Scyther! :-D It was tough, but showed a softer side to the smaller, weaker Pokemon, and it had great determination and loyalty. It’s great that a Pokemon got a backstory and character like that.

We can now add Emily to the list to have 52 trolls in Pokemon! X-D Raidra (talk) 20:40, May 27, 2017 (UTC)

We get letters, lots of letters
That's a good point. It's good that Emily is meeting people that she's comfortable with and feels she can act friendly toward. Thinking about it, it's definitely a contrast to the last chapter (in which she was so nervous due to the Houndour attack and the urban legend).

"Skull is four characters while Kraken is six." You want to run that by me again?

From the stories I've heard, I think you should always carry some kind of knife when you meet people you discovered on Craigslist.

I think it's coming along nicely, albeit a little slowly. There are still some things they need to add, but there's been more activity, more discussion on how to improve the site, and more stories added. Raidra (talk) 01:41, May 29, 2017 (UTC)

Invitation to the Capsule Ball
I love how he riffs on so-called writers who can't bother with things like realism, nuance, character development, etc. and just dash off whatever they think will appeal to the least common denominator. He has to get to romance sometime since it's such a popular genre.

I haven't seen a lot of it, though I have looked at the wiki, and I've watched a JohneAwesome Let's Play video for one of the games. From what I've seen it looks both interesting and funny (and occasionally gross). You hear people say, "Oh, it's just a Pokemon rip-off!" but these creatures are generally based on spirits from Japanese folklore. I get that the theme of catching/befriending them all is similar to Pokemon, but there are a number of differences. I think a lot of people tend to brand anything similar to Pokemon as a rip-off. Sometimes they're right and other times they're not taking the time to see the differences.

Oh, those are great! You managed to fit so many references into such short stories (Lenora, Kurt, Satoshi, and maybe some I haven't caught yet). The part about the Triggered Generation spreading false stories was great satire. There's the rumor that the Gen I games are set after a war, so the second story made me jokingly think, "So that's what the war was about?" By the way, I think the auto-correct changed "Kanto" to "Mango" in the last sentence of the train story ("the supposed size difference between a Johto and Mango Pidgey"). Raidra (talk) 18:19, May 30, 2017 (UTC)