Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26926430-20150825131056/@comment-26715482-20150829210321

Take away the grammar mistakes and you're left with a below average pasta in my opinion. Some questions i'd like to ask are;Why did the teddy bear change to become evil? (but then he gained confidence.. what?) Why didn't the child throw away/destroy the teddy bear? Finally who's sharing the experience if they died?

Secondly the whole object being processed and killing them have been done before many times. As Carl said above me try different ideas make the story unique and not generic.