Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27002167-20150920061141/@comment-26475800-20150921030211

I am not going to go into the grammar, because that is normally not what I give advice on. I would list to the above comment though, because there were tons of errors. Again, I saw English isn't your native tongue, so that is forgiven; not to mention I make a ton of grammar errors as well and have others clean them up for me.

But the story itself was rather interesting. It reminded me of a few other stories, The Mist and The Fog are the first two that come to mind, but there are other odds and ends which seem like other stories. Anyway, it is something that should be revised and reposted on the WW to see what people think. It was hard for me to understand exactly what was happening because of the grammar issues. But once they are fixed I will love to look over this one again.