Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-31424920-20180609163328/@comment-9041013-20180609192312

This... This needs to be the next Halloween Movie. Not that stupid kinda fairytale stuff Rob Zombie made out of the frenchise.

With that being said, I'm not sure this holds up to the wiki's standarts as this is a spin off, and I'm not sure they are allowed, go over the rules before attempting to post this, just in case. I'd love to see it on the site. Definitely should be on this site. I love how your story actually feels like a movie, with Ms. Davis having a rounded character in which is this nice little reserved lady, the cheeky woman and a bit of a out of place badass woman who holds her boss by the balls. Kind of.

Lovely work with her, over all, she feels like a real person, while still pulling out some ridiculous movieplot-like moments. It's all good.

The story is pretty good, don't see many issues with it plot wise.

I do like how Michael is realistic and still the "pure evil" sort of character he is in his movies, I felt that if this was done about a real life person, Bundy would fit the role of this pure evil man. He looks through you, through everything, into a moment of something evil. Maybe Ed Kemper could fit here too, as he was huge yet rather mellow when not murderous and still just a plainly fucked up person. He apparently said that when he looks at a woman he wants to treat her real nice while at the same time wondering how her head would look on a stake. Michael is a realistic character in your story, which is good. He is a monster and yet so human.

That is mortifying.

Some more nitpicky stuff, why do people look at a under forty year old woman as "Old as a dinosaur" in a time when forty plus year old women still get cat called and look great. Myers killing three people, when it the movies he killed four and one dog, as an adult. So... why did he kill only three people? I know, I sound like a sadistic hyena now.

What else do I like, how you took the names of the disease characters of the first movie and gave them to the kids at your story. Yes, nobody really spells "Linda" as "Lynda" unless its a movie.

On another note, you've some issues with the technical side of your story, I've caught on some misspellings and such. Give it a second look and wait for further critiques.