Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9073039-20140604074913/@comment-24821182-20140604080834

The grammar - for the most part - meets quality standards, and the plot is coherent, so it's possible you could post this as an article.

Personally, I didn't like the story itself; I just felt like it was another revenge fantasy, and people who spend any amount of time reading my reviews will know I absolutely dislike revenge fantasies. The fact that all it took for him to become a sociopathic murderer was a break-up is really weird and cliché.

That he could toy with the insides of another person (which I assume is the first time he's done that) and not get sick or feel any discomfort about it is also reminiscent of so many other stories, where we have a kid who - for no reason and without foreshadowing - learns to find some twisted joy in gruesome stuff.

But keep in mind that this is just my personal taste. We have a number of users - particularly Jeff the Killer fans - who really enjoy these kinds of stories.