Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-32807959-20181216231739/@comment-36627132-20181217125147

Spelling and Grammar Issues: Some of the paragraphs are walls of text, please consider shaving them down a bit. Dr. Bob already pointed out that it has spelling issues, so I don't see why I should point anything else out.

Plot Issues: Some of this feels like pointless filler, the whole explanation of New York's history of violence for example. I don't really think it is possible to conceal a knife in a cigar. That aside, the story really isn't scary.

I do wish you luck on your next story.