Talk:Something to Get Off My Chest/@comment-26054278-20150826184330

Late reviews, but hey, at least I'm getting them out.

I was most certainly amused by this story.

Maybe it is just me, but I haven’t really heard of this sort of kind demon in many things. Therefore, I thought this was pretty creative to have that one, more sympathetic demon.

The character of this demon is pretty interesting as well. He seems to not like violence, but he still loves messing with Catholics, apparently. Also, he makes allusions to previously liking to kill, but now feels misunderstood. He is a character that the reader can actually get invested in what he says because he shows immediate discomfort and dislike towards violent actions such as dismemberment and murder. He isn’t exactly a saint, as he did essentially stalk a girl home once and he likes pulling pranks on Catholics, but he still doesn’t come across as a bad person.

Perhaps that is due to the very kind and genuine writing of this pasta. It really does feel like this writer is getting something off of their chest and simply confessing, as the title establishes. It is a style that really works. Also, the lack of any typos helps.

The pacing is perfect. I wouldn’t change a thing about the way this pasta flows. What I would do, however, is make this story creepier and less predictable.

A lot of the beginning of the pasta isn’t too disturbing, and while that last segment before the “twist” was an attempt, but I feel it could have been made much more disturbing if some more details were included.

I did predict the twist, though. I started guessing when he said how he thought that people used to be made of “stronger stuff”, as though he is not human himself. However, it became a lot more obvious when they described the sort of stuff his old friends did at the party and how he didn’t quite get into their entertainment like they did.

I didn’t, however, predict that he would end up addressing the reader and saying that he was going to attack us personally, which, like I mentioned early, was a good attempt to involve some last minute creepiness. However, since the story banked a lot on that final twist, the last line was pretty disappointing.

Not one of my favorites, but a strong effort. 80/100.