Talk:The Cell Phone Game/@comment-34032049-20171221220606

It seems like the romance was written by someone who has never really experienced intimate relationships.

The moral back and forth is also way over the top ([paraphrasing] what you are doing is evil . you arent the person i fell in love with. you have slipped into something unloveable..i still love you)

Very unrealistic situations. This only matters because the story starts by trying to convince us this actually happened somwhere

overall wayy too dramatic for highschool kids.

WHAT I DID LIKE was how the whole Nazi thing seemed like the "Over-the-top" cherry on the sundae but it turned out to be pretty tasteful imo. Using the Nazi culture to torture himself in an attempt at self preservation...nice

I dont mean to bash. the writer is very creative and seems to be able to weave and exciting story. It just seems like an obvious first attempt. Look forward to more of your work.

4/10