Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-44987001-20200205002909/@comment-5306249-20200205014539

Ninja wolf is tops wrote: NedWolfkin wrote: Carzyshark28 wrote: So how can I make it better Honestly, it is pretty much doomed from the start by being a blacklisted subject. We're at a point where anymore video game pastas aren't scary at all. Of course horror is subjective, but certain things have just completely lost their shock after a while.

On top of that, this is riddled with cliches which have been outright banned (hyper realism, for example).

I suggest you take more time on your stories. This one lacks proper capitalization (i.e. "x box", "fortnite"), punctuation, and quotation marks.

Take more time on your stories. You can't just zoom through writing one and expect everything to turn out perfectly. I have thought of a way video game creepypasta can be scary what if the game is shifting our attention to it while we ignore big real world problems but one day someone steps away from the screen and discoverers the horror of the real world While that is a decent prompt (and I don't wanna backseat moderate here), you guys would probably be better off sticking to one thread/one story idea at a time, just so things don't get cluttered. 8}