Talk:The Quiet Life/@comment-5733573-20181003185700

I like this quite a lot. One thing is confusing to me: are people actually showing up to be shown around this place by a ghost? If not, think about how you might make this clearer to your reader. Apart from that, the character of Mary is delightful and I really felt for her at the end. Describing Mary herself in a little more detail toward the beginning, possibly as she's getting ready in a mirror or something, would help to make her... ahem... come alive even more. Overall, very lovely piece with some real heart.