Talk:Another World/@comment-25558572-20140728001408

Maybe it's because I only read it once, but I really didn't completely understand the story. What exactly was the threat that was facing the entire Earth? It's good to be subtle, and while it was clear that the Earth was in danger, the fact that I couldn't understand what frustrated me slightly more than it intrugied me.

Not to say that the story wasn't interesting. It was; the way the concept is executed was decently original, and you used a pretty good level of description throughout the story. I feel like you could make it shorter, though, and include more detail as to what happened in the end. But your style of writing is good; you have no noticeable technical errors, and while the story is a bit vague, it is a good read for anyone who wants to see something other than blood and gore and still be creeped out.