Talk:Nana Razor/@comment-24229645-20140723121247

I love this! It's very well-written and shows a good command of the rules of style. (One would think these things would be a given, but much of the writing one encounters online wouldn't pass muster even at elementary school level, so it's a treat to read something that doesn't sound like it was written in crayon.) I love the fact that you shared the rhyme before segueing into the story. The setup is sound, to the point while still allowing the reader to develop sympathy for Ally. I'm particularly impressed by the ending, which I didn't see coming. I expected the usual "...and the police found her Daddy's mutilated body but no clues as to the perpetrator, and Ally was shipped off to the orphanage" overly pat finish. Daddy's disappearance (which cannot flatly be called his death, as no body is found) as well as Ally's--that was a very nice, unique touch. I will be reading all your pastas with great enthusiasm. Thanks! 10++