Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-28428152-20181119060745/@comment-7673575-20181119210653

'Aight, time for the Second Massacre of Acre, but this time, by friendly fire.

I like it. It isn't too apart from the song, which is both good and bad, but the little backstory, and the fact that Evil Elrond is real, instead of just a figment of Boy's imagination, made it a whole lot better.

What I suggest you do, is change the dialogue in some places. It seems to be copied directly from the poem itself (yes, we do have it here muhahaha!) and that makes it seem like Günther and Hugo were flyting, which is kinda awkward.