Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24941775-20140606071934/@comment-24381191-20140606120421

This story was really good. It kept me in suspense till the ending but the ending itself seemed unfulfilling, maybe you should have elaborated more on what the entity was and why it was doing this. Also, who/what was AWH?

There were a few things that seemed unrealistic, like when you first got the pen, you didn't say that you put ink in it, and then you started writing, you just simply wrote that you were writing with it. I don't think that anyone would give a pen with ink in it.

Also, the part where the narrator hugs the girl seems unrealistic as he barely knew her out of class, nobody would hug someone if they didn't know them.

There are few grammatical errors like 'awaked.' Shouldn't it be awoke?

There are some commas missing, like after then. Good story overall.