Talk:Kelly Came Back/@comment-5733573-20180815180841

Thanks for your comment on my talk page! I'm always happy to review a new story!

I liked this, but to be honest, it was fairly predictable. I knew from the outset that there were only a handful of ways this could go. It would have been more engaging if you included more information about "Kelly's" time in the forest. To me, that was the most exciting part and I really wanted to know more about it. Maybe some dialogue would be helpful for that section.

Overall, fun story, but I think it needs a bit more to really make it pop.