Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25941663-20151213010850/@comment-24101790-20151215220224

You don't necessarily have to paint the bad guy in perfect detail, but some hints at what he/she/it is would really strengthen in. A little mystery works wonders for a story, but too much can really strip it of its effectiveness.

I'll pop back in if you have a revised version (although I had heading home in a few days so it may take some time for me to get back to reviewing.)