Talk:The Arcade/@comment-27553469-20160222170729

Well, from the dates of the other comments, I'm pretty late. Nevertheless, the story was OKAY. It was borderline good, but there were quite the bunch of grammatical errors, especially the one in dialogue from the man with the knife. There are some pot holes as well. Such as--who was the kid with the slit neck playing the arcade game?

I'd be able to receive the message from the story as the boy (Needs proper characterization) went insane and the illusion of a killer popped out whence he really was the actual killer. That would have been the major twist that was a little roughly delivered in a confusing, obscure way if that's what you were going for. Anywho, I'd give it a 6.5/10 for the idealistic of it all...!