Creepypasta Wiki:Deletion Appeal

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A Plethora of Uneven Wings
Here is a link to my newly revised pasta:

http://pastebin.com/2APLJNac

I have taken the critique of one of the admins and revised my story accordingly. Before, the protagonist's actions made little sense and the story seemed unrealistic, not to mention it lacked a creepy premise. I've simultaneously added creepy factors to the story while outlining in more detail the illness of the main character, making his final loss of sanity more realistic and better paced. I've also dumbed down his actions, making them believable while still severe enough to warrant medical attention. All in all, I trust that the story is more cohesive now, and better illustrates its leap from phobia to insanity. Pokemongreen3867 (talk) 15:16, October 29, 2015 (UTC)


 * Here's somethings I noticed (CTRL+F to find): "I told him I had seen a ("a" is not correct) one and that's why I drove away.", "You would thing (think) that (might read slightly better without the first "that") a fear that controlled."


 * There's storyline issues still, the facility seems to take a non-expert approach to his disorder. Which, a facility like that should be filled with experts. The changes made were improvements, but the main character describes his disorder with an understanding that seems anti-climactic, and there's little conflict/resolution in the story. It still needs work, or it may be better to re-write the whole story. It may help to write an outline with the main events and a conclusion at the top before writing the story.


 *  SoPretentious 20:44, October 29, 2015 (UTC)

It's Merely Your Perspective
The story I wrote "It's Merely Your Perspective" should not be deleted.

The story itself passes all the quality standards set up by this wiki, it was most likely deleted due its original name "It's Mreley Yuor Prespcetvie". This purposefully misspelled name was written as it is becuase it is part of the story. It talks about seeing things from different perspectives and we see things from a crazed cannibal's perspective. I thought mispelling the title would be interesting, clearly I was wrong.

When I saw my original post deleted, I thought it was for the reasons described above. I was unaware of the rules about reuploading deleted posts (I'm new to the site). I posted the same story under a different name, the same title but spelled correctly. I thought that would fix this issue but clearly it hasn't.

Finally, I went back to the story's word doc page where it was created and double checked my work. I promise there is no errors that break any of the quality standards on this wiki. If I keep the title "It's Merely Your Perspective" instead of the original, this story has no problems.

To the admins, I'm sorry if you thought the action of me reuploading the story was to defy your rules. It wasn't, I was unaware, but this story has no problems with the new title.

Skill Flea (talk) 06:03, October 30, 2015 (UTC)Skill Flea


 * The story was deleted for not being up to quality standards. Starting with the basics, this is how the story is formatted:

"Hi there! Look, I know you came here looking for a thrill

and this wasn’t what you were expecting. But I promise that all of this will be" while not a massive issue, it is important to be aware of it for your following stories.


 * Wording issues: I'd avoid starting multiple sentences with conjunctions as it gives the story a choppy feel. "But I promise that all of this will be explained before we precede" "Suppose you see a red bicycle, just a typical bicycle that’s red – can you see that in your head?" Avoid repeating words like bicycle multiple times as it can get redundant. "It was hypostasized (hypothesized) that the second group received the memories on how to complete the maze from (the) first group by eating them."


 * Punctuation issues: "What could you possibly have planned for this evening!(?)", "Why the hell would this be such a problem!(?)", etc. Even rhetorical questions need to have a question mark. Hyphens missing from words directly connected: "two wheeled method"


 * Story issues: the protagonists constant self-reference and addressing the audience really weakened the story after multiple uses: "Now, now, don’t judge me like that, let ME explain.", "Are you doing that, why would you not!?", "Don’t you get that!?", etc. Once or twice is fine, but five+ times in a story with ten or so paragraphs is a bit excessive. Additionally you really should flesh out the scientific experiment to build the image in the audience's mind. It really feels like the latter half of the story is rushed due to the protagonist skimming through this entire basis for his decision to cannibalize and it hobbles the plot. The focus on the bike also needs a lot more explanation to it: "But I KNOW the paperboy’s bike WAS red because I SAW it!" It just feels like you didn't adequately address it before moving on with the story. I'm sorry, but there are still quite a lot of issues here with punctuation, wording, spelling, plot, etc so I'm going to have to turn down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 06:33, October 30, 2015 (UTC)