Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24946232-20140519105202/@comment-24821182-20140519111835

You could explain why they moved to a highly religious part of Africa, especially considering the main character doesn't have any religious beliefs of his own, and he wasn't raised in a religious household.

I'm surprised that the narrator can remember what happened weeks ago right down to the most minute details, even recalling exact dialogue. Does the story have to be written as a blog? Does it contribute anything to have the story in the form of a blog? Why is he even sharing this with people around the world?

Anyway, you've got a setup and a mystery so far, and I'm kind of curious to see where you're heading this story, so I would like to read more. I you feel like continuing with this story, I'll be reading it when you post more.