Talk:Listen/@comment-25052433-20150521031820

This was a cool story and I enjoyed it, although I would offer two critiques.

This is more of a personal pet peeve, but I never like it when Creepypasta is referenced in a Creepypasta. It seems a bit like pandering, but that is really more of an opinion.

The other critique is that your character's actions did not seem organic. If I received a message like that, my first instinct wouldn't be to get weirded out. Honestly, I would assume it was something more mundane before jumping the gun into the realm of the paranormal.

The character's refusal to turn down the music also seemed like a plot stopper. If there was something going on, and the character was curious, most people would turn down the music, or text back their friend asking what they mean.

As I said, this is a good pasta if the reader makes a lot of exceptions for the character's somewhat artificial behavior.