Talk:Mr. Top Hat/@comment-26906311-20150827084002

Okay, some parts were rather confusing, why wasn't it surprising that Chris was developing a strange diet just because he was a second child? And the part about the drawing, I wouldn't have found it weird if I had a kid who drew someone like this (aside from the grey face as described), think about it this way, Chris is still in Kindergarden. How many kids would actually remember to add features like eyebrows or eyelashes in? And with the teacher screaming when she saw the hand, you mean to tell me that no one noticed a grey man in a "sinister" hat talking to the little boy for more than three weeks? You can't say that he was talking through the vent either, if he was, Chris wouldn't have realised most of the man's features. It's very hard to see in a dark place, so there was no way Chris would've even been able to tell that he was wearing a hat, or the colour of his skin, after all, what colour does your skin seem to be in a dark place? That's right, a shade of grey, or if dark enough, black. It would be very natural to assume the person you were talking to had normal skin colour (depending on where Chris comes from). Also the writing was a bit unusual at this part, "They thought that the man had escaped," usually when you write these kinds of phrases, it ends up with the man being caught. But in no way was it specified, that "Mr. Top Hat" had been caught, or how he even left the scene. Since you have stated that there were several polices at the school, NONE of them realised a man with such unusual features running about? There were many contradictory parts, but kudos for the plot so overall I'd give it a 5/10.