Talk:Ashes in the Lake/@comment-27123781-20151110175839

I came to the same conclusion your main character did... at first. I figured scent was the least meaningful sense. Then I remembered how when you are really sick and cant breath through your nose, how plain your sense of taste is. Food looses a lot of its exciting flavors when you cant smell. I decided to change my decision to taste. Though I truly adore food and all of its spender--hell I even spent most of my career cooking--, at least I would get into better shape without the tempting flavors. I could eat all that gross healthy food and not give a damn :P. I was glad I made this decision because as soon as he started walking back I remembered what you specifically wrote about the scents.

All of that aside, I had a few things to point out. Sadly some of what I wanted to point out was forgotten ( I didn't write it down because I had to switch to my mobile device while I made a delicious breakfast that I would be missing out on if I really had to lose taste).

Firstly, "...because of what my past predecessors had the audacity to do." Past predecessors isn't a big deal, it's just a little redundant.

Second, I want to start by saying that neoteric was a new word for me. I just wanted to clarify if by neoteric riches you mean private jets and fast cars? I was only caught off guard a little by it because no neoteric riches were references. I do like the word though. I also like tenebrous.

I guess it makes sense that even though she has no right to the jar of ashes, she could just walk over and take it. After all, he his still in her home, her land.

So all in all it was a really good story, it's been a while since I've been able to sit down and just enjoy a well told tale. I tend to get tired of the stale attempts at fear that so many authors go for with gore and murder. Maybe just sit down and read through it again, try to pick out tiny errors that are speckled throughout the story. There's no real big issues that I can see.