Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25825682-20150307211405/@comment-25547916-20150308151852

I'm a bit confused by the chapter thing; are you planning on pasting a chaptered story or is this a personal project? If you are plannning on posting, the utter length is a bit daunting, and I might consider signifigantly trimming parts of the story. As for the actual content, it's difficult to say much about it, as it seems to be just the exposition. The start is pretty good; Alexander's confliction about speech therapy and his visit to the cemetary makes for a suprisingly human character, the kind that doesn't generally appear in creepypastas. In contrast, the other characters were a bit uninteresting. Additionally, Alexander's animosity towards Arnold seems wholly unfounded. Perhaps Arnold has some history with Alexander that will be filled in in the future, but for now it seems incredibly out of character for Alexander to hate him so much. Two minor things that stood out a bit: it seems a bit strange how detailed Alex was when talking to the grave and it seemed off when the story's perspective changed to view the workers. I'd suggest leaving the workers out entirely, but if you think you can make it work, by all means go for it. Overall in my opinion, your story has some good writing and an interesting main character, but it needs signifigant pay-off to justify its sheer length.