Talk:Laughing/@comment-27654266-20160531042107

Spoiler alert for the pasta in the review below!

Also, I know this pasta is like a century old, or something.

Seriously, it's just a review, and it helps the author not be a cringelord, unless he's stopped, now.

This was probably the worst creepypasta I've ever read that didn't get moved onto Trollpasta wiki.

It was fine, perfectly fine, at the beginning, you could've done something good.

And then you added that thing, instead of adding something original, you just changed little things about Slenderman, and added excessive gore.

Aside from this, there's also flat, uninteresting characters that have not been given any depth, too.

Enough with vague complaints, though, I'll point out most wrong with this.

First and foremost, dumbass protagonist.

A skeletal hand touches the protagonist, and his thought process goes: "Everyone else is walking away and this dead thing is walking towards me, oh, a skeletal hand. I'll make friends with it."

After this suicide-inducing scene, the protagonist makes friends with a horrible demon that would kill everybody at the drop of a hat, is bleeding out of the back of his head, and is around 8 feet tall.

And he's perfectly fine with it.

After I had a seizure from this scene, I was disappointed to find the protagonist didn't get brutally murdered.

Second off, the presentation of Slenderman without actually being a Slenderman pasta.

I don't even really need to explain this, a lot of people would agree this is a dick move.

Third, edginess.

All caps sentences, along with random intervals of Bold characters at the end.

At the very end, his head splits open, revealing an edgy demon face which spews blood for cringe effect.

I'm quite unclear as to what the hell is going on after this, just a lot of blood, vomit, and bullshit.

After this, the guy ends up in a nuthouse in Canada, which is mildly believable, and the only thing done correctly here.

I'm not sure why people think this is good, because in my opinion -- yes, my opinion, it's absolute trash.

The only way I'll give the author a pass is if he's younger -- not likely, or if this was his first or second pasta.


 * Final Verdict|


 * Scare Level| -- "0/10 The Complete Works of Shakespeare"