Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25036236-20140612132233/@comment-24821182-20140612135810

The only grammatical error I find worth mentioning is:

"...the victims eyes..." which should be "...the victim's eyes..." or "...the victims' eyes..."

This error is made twice in the same paragraph.

As for the text itself, I think you should expand upon it by adding more interviews with people who've seen it, as well as more photographic evidence. Also, I think the CNN interview should be just a wee bit different, as I can't imagine a (credible?) news station letting some guy on air to talk about how this girlfriend became a supernatural monster a la Slenderman.

Create a variety of different sources that all contribute with some minor bits of information, which come together to give us a good understanding of the Furtim Seductor. Try not to impose the view that it's real, but leave it up to the ones faced with the "evidence" you've provided to decide whether or not they believe in it.