Talk:Starvation/@comment-3541151-20150210141512

Discount Necrosleep.

I know you only had a DAY to write this, but I'll be frank, it IS half bad. Actually, it's over half bad.

The story's patterns are too similar to Necrosleep, but with different circumstances. There are statements out of place.

Do you have the time? Yeah, let me check my watch... it's BULLSHIT 0' Clock! A CLOCK can't tell you how many times in DAYS has passed. What? Was it tuned to Calender Radio?

"Welcome to Calender RADIO, your spot for how many days it's been, since you checked! Here's Jimmy Duffet's It's Always Bullshit 0' Clock Somewhere!"

While some of the story is engaging and enjoyable, along with before mentionned flaws, it is bland and forgetablle. What?! Was this written in a day?!

(shifts eyes) Well, I say you lose this contest! Ha! (shiftts eyes) Oh yeah, I-I'm not a judge, I'm a critic...

Arg! 3/10 No one asks me  to be a judge, anymore! (stomps out of room and cries)