Talk:Death the Kid

Your story just has a lot of missing info as it sort of rushes into things. Take your time explaining what the 14 year old son did when he was hanging out with his best friend which lead to the "accident" and him being a suspected murderer. Also, try putting in some more adjectives to let the reader get his imagination going and think of the scenery on the thought. Just needs a bit of a filler to make it a good story.

I'm new aswell to this website so I wouldn't know how things really work around here.

Gasseous (talk) 14:20, May 28, 2013 (UTC)