Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-29997932-20160918182616

This was my first attempt at writing a creepy pasta, as well as my first post on this Wikia.

Any advice and or critique is much appriciated and I will take it to heart to try and further improve my writing. And because according to someone who looked at the story, it is in desperate need of review.

Here's the link to the story: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Project_XM-001?action=edit&section=5 