Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24946232-20140601011401/@comment-24821182-20140601064902

It's good so far, and I only noticed a few grammatical errors:

In 11/06/13, you misspell "I'm" as "im".

In 14/06/13 you write "Bens" instead of "Ben's". You also write "Me and Ben" instead of "Ben and I". Also, you capitalize the k in "kid".

Other than these minor things, I'd say it meets quality standards, and once you've finished the story, you could try posting it as an article.