Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25618483-20141105142033/@comment-25618483-20141106143914

I can say the mirror of Sword of Slain with my own tale was not intentional. Though if I do any reworking to this I will keep the mirror in mind and maybe try to expand that.

The spacing is only supposed to be a single space, but i could not get the composer to cooperate at the time of posting, so it ended up with the large gaps, I also hate the large gaps.

I was attempting to go for the feel, that the narrorator did not know he was dead and maybe just went on living life. Which is why there was no talk of home life, and why he was the only one staying behind. However, as you mentioned, nothing is solved, at the end he still doesnt realize he is dead. Rather than a story it made it turn into a bit of voyerism. :(

I tend to be long winded & writting is not my strong suit, but reading other Pastas inspired me to attempt to make my own.

I greatly appreciate your comments and the time you took to read it. I have some serious work to do to this story if it is to ever turn out to be a creepy pasta.

Thank you again for your comments!