Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-35911608-20190530141440/@comment-9041013-20190531093336

Well most issues were addressed here.

This isn't exactly horror... Shit just happens and it's more of an exposition for some action story. I don't see anything in this that would work in the current form on the site.

I do have a suggestion, though, I'm not sure if you'll use it.

Here goes, what if this couple, Randy and Veronica are basically spirits that are trapped in a futuristic version of our world where there was some big military conflict leading to their situation. Now obviously they've died but you could make some sort of reveal that a ghosthunting group monitors them or something at the end. That would also work nicely with the setting the couple creates "This conflict was so terrible it did all these terrible things" It could add a bit to the horror factor.

You could also make the active rebels that have experienced the horrors of war and you can add these unpleasant details into their conversation or the serroundings.