Talk:Playing the Part/@comment-25041416-20140630172307

This is a good premise. The narrative reads like a sixteen year old's idea of what a dude who has been made world-weary and cynical with unearned success might sound like.

Here's a hint: A spoiled actor actually sounds a lot more like the most spoiled girl in the senior class complaining about the three days she had to work a summer job.

It is a nice premise and I'd hate to see you abandon it. If you can't quite nail the first person narrative angle you could always rewrite it in the third person. It isn't your fault that you're probably a little too young to be able to wear certain masques when you try to write fiction.