Talk:Yin Yang/@comment-25383866-20141109122048

This wasn't bad. I liked the first half but it just got weird after a while. The ending was a bit "And he was behind you the whole time!"-ey.

Some points about the writing: "et cetera" is a bit of a dirty word. If you've run out of things to say, then just end the sentence. You don't need to use it.

Multiple exclamation points- again, not necessary, and in my opinion they actually detract from the story a bit.

6/10, because the devil.