Talk:The White Men Came/@comment-7673575-20180226190514/@comment-33606996-20180226234224

Thank you for your honest and thorough review. I'd like to point out a few things, if you don't mind me doing so.

I was actually worried about the grammar and language, since English isn't my native tongue, so I'm glad to know I did well in that regard. I feared that my, let us say, "eloquence" would come off as pretentious, but I'm happy that it was at least tolerable. I might just be compensating one thing with the other.

As for the horror I did try to go for a more general feeling of dread as you've so sagaciously pointed out, so I understand completely that the "woah" factor wasn't really there in your eyes or the eyes of pretty much everyone who reads the story.

You know, the lyrical interpretation was kind of a slip up, because remembering the first lines of the song I began to plot how the story should go, and it wasn't until I had a pretty clear vision that I actually revisited the song. I felt like an idiot then, but I'm happy to know that despite that incredible oversight I managed to do well.

Finally, I really appreciate your enjoyment of my tale. I am somehow proud of myself for making a story that managed to keep someone with as much experience in horror and creepypastas as you entertanined all the way through, despite my own inexperience and the fact that I wrote it down in one 4 hour long sitting.

Anyway, whether I win or not I'll be just happy to have been object of such a nice, little concise review. Thank you once more.