Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24841732-20140425011715/@comment-24841732-20140425124126

Danatblair wrote: Personally, I'd consider a micropasta to be something shorter - a few paragraphs perhaps. I'm thinking of something in the realm of r/shortscarystories. Not exactly as specifically defined as their 275 word limit, but something like what I'd find there.

That said, I love the concept. The twist of having the person bascialy imprison themself is good. If you want it to be a micropasta, try condensencing a few of your paragraphs or sentecences. Some of you descriptions are a bit repetative or could use a bit of zing.

Collasping and condensing would let you choose the very best descriptors. It's like distilling hooch. You might get a lot less when you are done, but it has more kick than the stuff you started with.

I think this is a very solid move toward the start of a micropasta.

Thanks! On the note about it being too long, it is currently 278 words. I think it just looks longer because of the paragraph formating. Anyway, I will work on condensing the story as you said.

Err also, that "twist" you said, that was completly unintentional. Originally I meant that the monsters are in plain sight now. However, I like your understanding a lot better. A first I was worried that it wouldn't make sense. Thanks again.