Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25899303-20141220153848/@comment-24281984-20141220175407

Okay, right at a glance I can see a lot of problems. In the first paragraph as an example, “creepy pasta’s” should be “creepypastas” (punctuation error), “importanted” instead of “important” (word error), five dots in an ellipsis (each one should have only three dots, like this: …) and the first sentence is way, way too long. You definitely need to run this through a Microsoft Word document to correct most of your errors because there are enough here to make your story borderline unreadable. Proofreading is an essential step in writing that cannot be skipped if you want people to read your work and give quality feedback.

Also, this story is a wall of text. You need to make an indent each time you make a new paragraph, or else it will be even harder to read. On the wiki stories sometimes come out unspaced even if you proofread them, which is why you need to hit the “Preview” button (in the forums, the article editor is different)and check your story over before hitting “Submit”.

Onto the story itself, you seem to include all of the popular Creepypasta characters in it, which automatically considers it a spinoff and it would be deleted on sight even if it’s perfectly formatted and proofread. Honestly, the writing here is so poor I can barely understand what’s happening even when I read it over and over. All I can really say is that you need to proofread this if you want anyone to give feedback on the story and characters instead of how difficult it is to read.