Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4332089-20160808142418

I started writing horror stories a couple of months ago. The more I progressed, I learned that all motifs must be plot devices very or slightly related to the plot. I wrote my "first" creepypasta (there are two pastas I wrote before, but they're full of clichés) here: http://shardsharp2000.deviantart.com/art/The-Haunted-Three-625172957. I know I shouldn't write this sentence, but if anyone can give criticism on anyone of my stories there? 