Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140529072121/@comment-24821182-20140529085415

I thought the story was very good, and I really like the twist ending. I trust you'll correct grammatical errors before posting it as an article, so I won't comment on those.

The only negative thing I can currently think of is that this doctor had never lost a patient, which is highly unlikely. Even the best doctors aren't gods that can just cure any ailment or treat any medical condition properly 100% of the time. Losing a patient is natural for a doctor, even if everything is done perfectly by the book.

It would make the narrator seem more human if he had just been the most renowned doctor in the hospital, instead of some messiah that never had to face the harsh reality of death until the very end.