Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27857924-20160225002649/@comment-25037895-20160225084021

The premise may work if the EYE was a weapon intended to destroy the other species, with more events that create some suspense between the two races (or as you have it, with one species not knowing of the other species' existence). Also, if there were events about the building of the EYE, that would help make the story less anti-climactic.