Talk:The Tundra/@comment-24532164-20161209195111

Pretty good, I do think it could be improved upon. His reaction seems pretty severe for what he saw, he seems bloody terrified and I would get that if he had JUST seen the spirit, but he didn't, he'd had time to drive back and calm down so I'm not sure if he'd still be shook up enough to be screaming about it. Still greatly enjoyed the premise, though. Good job.