Talk:Red Butterflies/@comment-25561410-20141020143128

Hi!

This is my first comment, so forgive me if I miss any unspoken rules here.

First off, I definitely liked it. The writing is very ,very good. It feels natural to read and nothing bothers the reader at all. That is a major accomplishment and thus very impressive.

What little criticism i do have stems from how... light she takes it all. Cutting the second girl was very well done and believable (one could say testing it by cutting a second person may not be the nicest thing to do :D ), but the step to cutting (and killing) her own mother seems to be taken rather fast.

Again, I really liked it, but the ending seems to be a bit light and fast. Personally, I would think there would be a bit more pause, and an assumption of safety. After all, who would believe it? :)

But again, very good pasta!