Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140929222804/@comment-24381191-20141002140227

The twist was freakin' awesome! The foreshadowing was really clever too. Not scary, but pretty good.

All I can add is that there are a couple of grammatical errors that are probably just typos, like:

It's funny how the said protector's of the people don't really protect the people. Protectors doesn't need an apostrophe.

If I hadn't been apart of the group that slayed the neighbors, there should be a space between 'a' and 'part.' While apart is a word it is used in a different consequence.

by the family's of each victim. *Families.