Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33904527-20190126163425/@comment-9041013-20190128124645

So I was reading this and the whole time I was wondering, where's the scare or the punchline? There's none. You do not need to entertain the notion that there's a hidden truth, or that the conspiracy theories are correct in regards to the American Government. Firstly, they aren't true, most of them make as much sense as the world being a flat disk while all of the other planets are spherical (a statement issued by an actual flat earther somewhere on Twitter).

All you need to do to make this kind of story somewhat guttwrenching is just have a character from the upper echelons admit that the government doesn't give a shit about the population, which is basically how it is. You could also have a revalation of something politically sinister (like secret police in the USA, a slow build towards totaliarianism, an establishment of world domination by proxy through shrewed political and economical manuevers).

Something more outlandish could be to pull a full blown Hitler-plan that gets discovered.

You could go for something less realistic with a discovery of plans towards the end of the world scenario where the elite get to survive at the expanse of the whole population or something.

Iluminati scares and Aliens in ma gov't aren't exactly scary.

Also, even if we found out there are antmen in the governent, society wouldn't fall apart, it would just change itself (probably through violence towards that goverment) but no end of the world or apocalypse scenario.

Your story though, so up to you.