Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25975226-20150502083334/@comment-25891880-20150502175032

While this story has almost perfect grammar, it's not that good I'm afraid. To explain what I mean, it isn't creepy. It's just disgusting. The whole story is just about a man wiping his eye to get something out. You mentioned "eggs" at the very end which might mean something, but without enough detail no one could guess what it means.

I think you should start over and re-write the story, with either better details, or another story. Realize that creepy stories are better than disgusting stories. If you keep trying with this, I know you'll end up making a decent story. Good luck