Talk:A Silver Flame/@comment-4849011-20171227210619

It's especially interesting to read this after reading your old stories. I could tell from the very first line that you've improved as a writer and storyteller. One line I enjoyed was, “It positioned itself in front of David and stuck its tongue out like a dog yearning for a treat.” It's simple yet shows how much of an animal the beast was. I love the evocative details, and I agree with the others that the unique aspects were good too. The hypnosis aspect reminds me of folktales of animals or monsters having power over their prey (For instance, there's an old wives tale claiming that snakes have hypnotic power over birds). I also like the note of realism in having the police come to investigate the 911 hang-up. I look forward to more stories.