Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26475253-20151105031857/@comment-27080023-20151109144922

I liked this story. The idea of it, the psychology of it. I liked the ending (which is rare for me), although it was obvious that he was going to kill himself from pretty much the second paragraph. The main issue that I have here is the fact that the story was hard to read because of many, many punctuation errors. Maybe have someone else proof read it for you, or edit it for you?