Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25036236-20140616230141/@comment-4832646-20140617191029

So... this is your typical Jeff Inspired story. We wouldn't take this.

A lot of the problem is that you have a number of redundant areas in the story, it's fairly cliche, and it makes very little sense. The mother and father take things a little far with laughing about those texts (any parent worth their gall wouldn't do that). While I grant you sisters are that annoying, the stuff you have going on is normal and would't drive someone insane like that.