Talk:White with Red/@comment-27392678-20151213161250

I love that last line, but the rest seems kind of forced (in order to build up to that last line). As a story, it hasn't really been thought through enough.

Did the front desk lady actually want the hotel guest to look through the keyhole? If she didn't, why even mention it (several times, even?) Regular hotel guests don't just wander around the place trying locked doors and peeping through random keyholes.

Were the husband and wife meant to be non-human entities or just, like, regular human beings with a condition such as albinism (which would account for the pale skin and red eyes)? If the woman is haunting the hotel room after her brutal murder, then we are already talking "ghosts", so I see no reason why they have to be aliens/monsters or something as well.

If they are alien creatures murdering each other AND also coming back as ghosts, then the main two characters seem way too relaxed about it. When you cast your eyes on a ghost-creature-lady not of this realm, your first thought isn't going to be "Gosh, I really hope I didn't embarrass her".