Talk:Jukebox/@comment-25477067-20150112194537

I don't like this pasta. They decide to pick up a random jukebox, and then, all of a sudden, 666 cliche shows up? The journal reads like a story because of the typical "journal can write down everything I am thinking" device. The news article also sound nothing like a news article, due to the super-short sentences and the lack of real detail or interviews. The character is unbelivable. I think that the next day, that jukebox would be turned into scap by any real shopkeeper. Then we have no explanation why this happened other than the  "there were two, now there are none" which desn't tell us WHY. Most writers leave some details out. It helps make it creepier. But this much lack of detail? I am surprised. For having any sort of plot at all, and at least an attempt at writing a story, I will give this a 2/10