Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-4893169-20150627030850/@comment-4849011-20150721144748

Sorry I'm late! I don't think you should lose the accent. It's occasionally distracting, but I can follow it pretty easily, and I think the dialogue gives her character. I think I've said this with other works, but it's fascinating how you blend fantasy with real-life horrors (having nightmares, living through wartime, etc.). The stories are beginning to connect, there's a sense of dread wondering what will happen next, and there are humorous "Oh, that's so true!" touches, like the description of the public pool. All in all it's a good addition.