User blog comment:Spyrocks/How would you end NES Godzilla creepypasta?/@comment-3463291-20140525065846

I think the story really needs an overall revision. Regardless, if I could only end it differently, I would have something like Red killing Mothra during the Entropy maze chase and then have it followed by some weird replacement for the original game's ending.

I'm thinking it would be filled with bizarre, cryptic stuff that could be interpreted by Zach and the reader as a message among various messages of some sort from someone mentally ill who tampered with the cartridge for unclear reasons, presumably none of them being friendly (assuming where the ending is changed is the only place to tamper with, so we're keeping the KILL YOURSELF part and everything before it in). But it should just be thrown out as one possible answer to let people decide for themselves to keep more mystery to it. After that, enhance the spookies by having the game play normally (as described in that one log in the Transcendence Project) from then on.

Zach could look it over or have a tech-savvy friend do that and find something strange inside that by comparison with any other NES game, they think it could be the result of the weirdness. After this, they could send the game in to get it checked by professionals. After that? It could be determined that the object is something no one's seen before, but maybe Zach and the friend never find this out- the game simply isn't returned, or if it is the part is removed. This implies that ordinary people aren't allowed to be discovering things like such. All he has left are the pictures and story which could be made up by him.

With this, you can't entirely rule out the big two possibilities- that it's something supernatural, or that it's the result of someone (or some Earthly organization) doing something very strange with videogames. Likely to get declared a Polybius ripoff, sure. But it could be worth it.

If I could redo the story? Let's see. Remove the general "manchild" feeling Zach gives off, remove the "obviously wrong" details like the bleeding Gezora (or at the very least, have him get a bit uneasy over what he's seeing and try to ask for assistance or just at least not then ONLY be spooked by the giant Moguera; however it turns out, mentally prepare then for the spookies, possibly justifying it like in the story that he isn't a pussy and won't run with his tail between his legs from a dumb copy of his favorite crappy game.) And that's just the beginning of what could be. (At the very least we can get some analysis of what went wrong there.)

If we run with the idea that RED is alive and behaving like in the story, possibly have RED giving him a choice somehow (maybe through Face?) as to getting more options, better graphics, new and interesting levels, etc. Zach takes them which obviously turns out to be a remarkably bad idea. With this RED's powers could even affect his mind to the point where he gets perpetual pleasure from playing, to the expense of his bodily functions, mental stability and/or social life, much like how a mouse or rat in an expeiment died from starvation when it continued to get pleasure from electrical pulses to its brain from pressing a button in an experiment.