Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24996913-20140902064431/@comment-24996913-20140902073537

SoPretentious wrote: [everything is so baron] -- Do you mean barren? As in, a barren wasteland. I suppose if that's what you meant, "baron" is a word also. It wouldn't really fit in the story, though.

[I wanted so badly to abide by what was right; I wanted so badly to imagine a life far from the pain and loneliness I felt consistently, but I couldn't.] -- This is a perfect example of how to use a semi-colon. Most other times, in the story, the semi-colons could be replaced with commas. Try to weed out the sentences where you don't need the semi-colon. Unless, you wanted it that way.

There's always an un-capitalized letter following the semi-colon.

Wow, that conclusion was excellent. Pretty flawless on the last paragraph.

Yes, that was a typo. Thanks for addressing that. And, I've been practicing on my semicolon work, as I'm not very good with punctuation concerning them, so that's why I used them so much. And I was almost certain you capitalized after semicolons if there is a complete sentence following it. But thank you for the feedback :).