Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-9041013-20180621195836/@comment-9041013-20180624085559

RedNovaTyrant wrote: BloodySpghetti wrote:

Oh you weren't harsh. I did have an issue with the depersonalization of the dream narrator from reality narrator. I did this because of the comments on the previous pasta where people had no idea whats going on at all. This time it had too much info, I guess.

I changed the ending heheheheheh....

Also, the whole pasta wasn't about as just scarying you in the usual sense, it was more of an emotional scare thing. But yeah... I see, kind of, what you were up to.

I re-did this into a second draft. Ahh, okay I getcha. But yeah, I see why it was changed. I don't really know what I would do, since these are two very different drafts, so I suppose just play around with whatever one you like more until it works. MAKE THE SQUARE FIT IN THE CIRCLE HOLE So what's are your suggestions about this one?