Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24714617-20140512023110/@comment-24304936-20140514115552

I liked until until the ending. It felt rushed. I would've like to have seen more development from the siblings'point of view and/or see the exact point where they snapped and the protagonist leveled out. Detail is everything, and you did a fine job until the ending.

Also, you could've added more detail to the demon's delight in shifting his duties from the boy to the siblings as well as expanded upon the empathy the narrator showed for the boy. Who was this narrator? Why did he care so much about this boy?

TL;DR - All in all, not bad. Just feels unfinished.