Talk:I Don't Want to Set the World on Fire/@comment-25975226-20150520103930

I thought this was a really interesting and new concept. As others have also commented, it is a different perspective as third person is not the norm for most pastas. However, I definitely think you need to work on your grammar. There are a lot of mistakes in this, too many that I didn't bother to correct them. You swap tenses a lot, and forget to put endings on words sometimes. You wrote 'begin' instead of 'began' at one point. This story was a pretty neat little one, but I kept getting distracted by the mistakes.

Overall, I think 7/10 is fair. Well done :)