Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24101790-20161008211233/@comment-24101790-20161012024403

Vngel W wrote: ~snip~

Thanks for the review, I corrected the mechanical issues you pointed out. I will spend some time thinking on how I'm going to explain how/why the intruder stepped in the flour with both feet. As for not taking anything, I would probably leave it at the person breaking in, getting flustered, and fleeing without stealing anything (the police's theory) as anything else might shift the ambiguity. I'll try to spend some time this week trying to smooth out those wrinkles and reviewing it for any other issues I may have overlooked. Once more, thanks for the review.