Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-26366473-20150505172912/@comment-25037895-20150505222755

Here's my advice:


 * 1) "It must be them" thought the officer "I better take them out of this place"| Quotations need to be punctuated. Like this: "It must be them," thought the officer, "I better take them out of this place."
 * 2) Numbers should be written out unless money or digital time/dates.
 * 3) "Strange" though Jackson, has he reached for the handle.| Again, needs a comma after "strange". "Though" is misspelled, should be thought. Also, "has" should be as.
 * 4) trying to calm the woman down, "but I've received a| Capital letters at when someone starts speaking, even in the middle of a sentence.
 * 5) "Paralized" is misspelled, should be paralyzed.
 * 6) "What the hell!?".| Extra punctuation, take out the period.