Talk:The Pale Emperor Gave Me Life Advice/@comment-36393004-20181123210031/@comment-36393004-20181124020229

The eplises I copy/pasted in my comment wasn't a quote. I only put quotations around it because it was an exerpt from your story. That was an example of the issue I was pointing out. There are words that are misspelled and sentences that are awkwardly worded.

MIsspelling:  They are small and spread out, so it's hard for me to locate at this time. They are minor mistakes, like you would use an "m" instead of a "b" like you simply experienced a typo but they are things that should have been addressed with a good proofread. I fixed some of the things I saw earlier. Like the first time you wrote "masochist" it was misspelled. I am pretty sure "sadomasochist" is supposed to be hyphenated into "sado-masochist". Things like that.

Capitalization: "Death ran his face over his delicate chin and then said, “His wife, she was infertile and died from Cancer, I remember being in this shack not too long ago. I was expecting him to die from rabies for a while now. He contracted it years ago while hunting. It was dormant for decades.”

Edit: Cancer does not have to be capitalized unless it is at the beginning of a sentence or you are talking about someone's astrological sign.

Capitalization: "“Uhh… I don’t… I don’t know. I’d like to assume that of Rabies because it’s far quicker but the pain of the furious and the dumb stages must be horrendous, I really have no idea…”

Edit: Rabies does not need to be capitalized.

Awkward Wording: "That’s when a lightning had stricken the ground close to the two of us, revealing a massive shadow forming out of Death’s thin frame."

Probaby should be: That's when lightening had struck the ground close to the two of us, revealing a massive shadow forming out of Death's thin frame.