Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-24037587-20140908115601/@comment-24304936-20140908181255

You're really going to hate me now.

But, if you're going to add journal entries like that, you need to be more descriptive with the entries. A reader wants to see how Cherri slowly becomes insane and deformed. The progression of something like that is usually the most shocking. Even if she still has her little sister in mind.

Seriously though. I admire the effort you are putting forth, but stop rushing. Take some time to make this story truly good. The site will still be here for you. It's better to have something well thought-out than rushed.