Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-25056485-20140616015157/@comment-24918243-20140617052405

Few things:

Try not to use brackets. Brackets are for mathematical formulas, not prose.

Some of the sentences could be broken up into two sentences.

Don't use all caps. If an admin sees that your story will probably get deleted for quality standards.

Also try to read your story out loud, so you can spot awkward sentences.

Keep writing ;)