Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-27119260-20151027075730/@comment-27119260-20151027181518

Apart from that, Jeff never had Bi-polar, he snapped from what is Bullying not a mental condition. That gives some "excuse" and the protagonist multiating themselves like Jeff is similar to Zack, okay, so Jeff and Zack both kill people, well thats similar so, I know you're going to counter that easilly so I just pointed it out to see the outcome and how quickly any idiot would know you would say that and don't think I'm starting an argument, I'm not. I'm stating points and somewhat facts here and there. Despite the detail and quite impressive use of adjective, no one quite understands the phrasing. It's phrased in a way people like my Dad who are older would narrate something. My dad's in his Late 50's...and his period he used most of the context and phrasing you see dispatched in my story, he uses it everyday and so it blows on me and I use it in writing, I like that style. I again know there's going to be a counter here since I've experienced it so many times in my previous "discussions" like this although the people I was discussing with were total idiots and didn't even know how to round to the nearest 100 for god's sake and they were in their 30's. So let's move on out of that and into the orgasm like climax, THIS STORY "IS" OR "HAS" FLAWS. There what everyone was thinking has ejaculated out of the deep hole of high blood pressure and stress (This sounds more related to Sex than it does the topic, Hah!) So. That's over and done with, I thank SO SO MUCH for the contributions with fixing my story and giving me more experience in criticism. The fact that I get angry quite severely may be some sort of early stages of bi-polar (I need to see my GP just incase, you never know, I might be way off track but we'll see) So, thank you again and I really appreciate it for your humble hospitality, goodbye and I will try to improve in the future.

Thank you so dearly,

DementedPasta (talk) 18:15, October 27, 2015 (UTC)DementedPastaDementedPasta (talk) 18:15, October 27, 2015 (UTC)