Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-33957951-20171215212855/@comment-24101790-20171217215837

"Her head spun around in a circle on her neck time after time, as if she was a toy and someone had winded up a crank implanted on her back." - I would say the analogy could use some change as I'm not really familiar with too many crank toys that spin their head Exorcist-style so you're using a similar item that isn't quite common.

I would suggest after re-writing (posting the version here on the same thread over the original or in this comment chain) and getting more feedback for it. As for the final version, you do need an admin's approval or to pass the deletion appeal, but I would strongly suggest only messaging an admin or making an appeal once you are certain you've fixed up a lot of the issues mentioned.