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<p>I would like feedback, good or bad, and a title suggestion for this story. Thank you!
</p><p>02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)02:30, April 11, 2014 (UTC)Crazy Whovian (talk)
</p><p>April 1
</p><p>Today I was playing minecraft. Then I looked down over a feild. DONT TRY TO HIDE was printed in the ground with red wool. I don't have red wool.
</p><p>I will find you, hacker!
</p><p>April 2
</p><p>Today the words DONT TRY TO HIDE were in my yard. It's like the grass was spray-painted red all of a sudden. Weird. I hope this is some sort of sick joke.
</p><p>April 3
</p><p>Today I woke up and everything red in my house was arranged in the words DONT TRY TO HIDE. I am wondering what I shouldn't hide from.
</p><p>April 4
</p><p>My clothes have actual blood on them. I'm really freaked out. I mean, what do I do?!
</p><p>April 5
</p><p>I am so freaked out! Those words, they are on my wall!
</p><p>April 5, night
</p><p>I can't sleep. Those words are everywhere, written in blood, everywhere! What's that shadow...
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(Edited by Crazy Whovian)
Sorry about the random stuff at the top. I didn't know that would show up.
(Edited by Crazy Whovian)
<p>Minecraft was black listed sorry, but it's a nice and short little thing. I personally think that you were too vague and quick for this to be a widely accepted pasta. My suggestion is to expand in some way, possibly explain who/what is after the character, maybe go a little out of just saying one sentence a day. Most people with daily journals write more than that. And DON'T TRY TO HIDE might make a good title but I was never good with that sort of thing.
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(Edited by MasterT95)
<p>Thanks MasterT95.
</p><p>As for the rest of you...
</p><p>Please post your feedback and title idea! I've had two days with nothing!
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(Edited by Crazy Whovian)
<p>All I can say is that there is not much to say about this pasta. It's way too short, like it's an outline for a pasta you're actually planning to write. I mean, what's the point of starting a journal because of some minecraft glitch and only explaning it with a sentence each time?
</p><p>And come on, on April 3, (I'm assuming) his real life stuff is mysteriously arranged. I'm sure any normal person would do more than just write one sentence about it in his journal, nomsayin'?
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(Edited by Crinal123)