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ALL POSTSNeed help on English for "Murderer Maiden"
Deleted it so people don't QQ about me copying which makes 0 sense
(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)
I'd give the story itself a 6/10. IF you fix it.
(Edited by Johnathen stuart)
<div class="quote"><i>Johnathen stuart wrote:
"Later that day the police find that she was killing herself they take her to crazy room where people try to kill himself or killing others. After checking on her the police was shock that she was dead." <p>Tell me crystal... did you review your story before submitting it? Or do you simply not understand the use of proper grammar? </p> </i></div>
<p>I did read it myself and I have my friend helping me with English just fyi my English is poor and its not my frist language but thanks for rating tho </p>
"Later that day the police find that she was killing herself they take her to crazy room where people try to kill himself or killing others. After checking on her the police was shock that she was dead." <p>Tell me crystal... did you review your story before submitting it? Or do you simply not understand the use of proper grammar? </p> </i></div>
<p>I did read it myself and I have my friend helping me with English just fyi my English is poor and its not my frist language but thanks for rating tho </p>
(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)
I fixed everything thanks to my friend now you can check
(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)
<p>Ah... Well... that make me look like a bit of a jerk then, doesn't it? Sorry 'bout that.
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(Edited by Johnathen stuart)
<div class="quote"><i>Johnathen stuart wrote:
Ah... Well... that make me look like a bit of a jerk then, doesn't it? Sorry 'bout that.</i></div>
<p>Its fine it doesn't hurt me if you still rated 6/10 its fine but if you want to change it feel free i'm just looking for if this is ready or not </p>
Ah... Well... that make me look like a bit of a jerk then, doesn't it? Sorry 'bout that.</i></div>
<p>Its fine it doesn't hurt me if you still rated 6/10 its fine but if you want to change it feel free i'm just looking for if this is ready or not </p>
(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)
Fixed the end so its not choppy I think this is ready to go
(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)
Its live now if anyone want to read it feel free
(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)
<p>my creepypasta got deleted :|
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(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)
It was deleted because the copy you posted was the same as the one uploaded here. You made little to no changes and it was deleted for a number of reasons that the people on this forum mention had already warned you about...
(Edited by EmpyrealInvective)
<div class="quote"><i>EmpyrealInvective wrote:
It was deleted because the copy you posted was the same as the one uploaded here. You made little to no changes and it was deleted for a number of reasons that the people on this forum mention had already warned you about...</i></div>
<p>what you want me to do really its done there no need to be change </p>
It was deleted because the copy you posted was the same as the one uploaded here. You made little to no changes and it was deleted for a number of reasons that the people on this forum mention had already warned you about...</i></div>
<p>what you want me to do really its done there no need to be change </p>
(Edited by CrystalMaryrose)