<p>Not badly written, but a bit predictable. She was in a coma, comes in the house, then the hospital calls. No offense, but I saw this coming a mile away. Don't know how to give any more constructive criticism, since it's such a short story; obviously any kind of build-up is probably out of the question, since you're trying to adhere to the micropasta standard. This would be better with more added and <i>no</i> indication that ending was going to happen as it did i.e. just a regular short story.
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