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ALL POSTSHere is a pasta its my first and i want to see if it is good.
<p>Do you know that feeling when you want to kill everyone in the room that you see,no not the people you hate but people you dont even know even kids.
</p><p>You see its our primal way coming back the ways when we used spears and rocks, but yet we do not try to sate it. You know why you don not try to break out and murder all you see in a room.
</p><p>Because I make sure you do not.
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Sorry i had a little typos remember its my 1st
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<p>No, I don't know that feeling.
</p><p>You spell <i>don't</i> and<i> it's</i> wrong. There's also grammatical errors like "...coming back the ways when we used..."
</p><p>The story was too short and said so little. Also, it's not our "primal way" to kill without reason. I think it seems like a cool concept, to have some kind of being or higher power preventing humans from falling into despair and violent behavior, and you could probably write a good story about it. This wasn't a good story though.
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<p>This is too vague. You're trying to state something you're assuming to be true of all of us, then saying you're the reason we don't do it? Sorry, but nothing scary to see here.
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I know its just somthing that poped in my head and if I said if I am not lazy ill write a full thing about it
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Do you even review what you write? your last comment alone had 7 typos in it.
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