I hate to just repeat what was said before, but your dialouge is very good. The nuances are just right, and interactions feel more human than most creepypastas. Your pacing is nice, too, and I like the little details, such as the taste of coffee in his mouth. It's great that this isn't just a rushed story made for cheap scares, and I can tell that wherever you want to go with it, it'll be great. 

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