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First of all, the title doesn't need quotes and it's incorrectly capitalized.

There's also some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.

Then there's the plot. I'm not real sure, but I think the problem lies in its execution. There's no backstory on the doll. What does it look like? Is it possessed by a demon? Is there some kind of camera and a stalker on the loose? All we know is that the character's daughter is missing, but there's no justification other than a doll. There's no imagery, no logical reason. It's a bad expectation here to expect suspension of disbelief, because the way the story seems written makes it hard to do so.

In other words, this definitely needs work.

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