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Casper, the Not-So-Friendly Ghost (DENIED)

An admin deleted this story without any reference to rules I failed to follow. Rather, the admin seemed to delete the story based on their opinion, on the basis of disliking the story. See below:

  • I'm sorry, but this theory feels incredibly rushed with very little evidence to back it up. Add onto that the brief nature of the post at a few sentences and this ends up feeling like something that was written without a lot put into the execution of the premise. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:25, February 23, 2019 (UTC)*

Jake Wick (talk) 19:32, February 23, 2019 (UTC)

I'm sorry you feel that way, but there is little to be subjective about here. Your story doesn't have enough content to really form any real opinion on it due to its short and repetitive nature. Your story is rushed, provides very little evidence to back up the theory, and a lot of work doesn't seem to be present in its execution.
Story issues: The theory is rushed. At five sentences long, it comes off as incredibly repetitive to state the same thing multiple times without adding anything to it. Here are two sentences back-to-back that exemplify this point: "Why doesn't he have a huge band of friends by the end of the series? Seems like he should have amassed a whole hoard of companions..." In a longer story this could be used to accentuate points in-between evidence, but here it ends up feeling like a space filler due to the lack of any real examples to back up the claims.
Story issues cont.: You provide no evidence to back up the theory. You basically posit that any character that isn't featured consistently in the show met some unfortunate fate at the hands of Casper, but you don't really back that up with anything. Given that there are dozens of episodic shows that follow the same formula (Scooby Doo for example), what ends up separating them in regards to your theory? There isn't enough given to really form a good basis for a theory.
Story issues cont.: It comes off like very little work was put in for the execution of the premise. "Ever notice how, at the start of each episode of "Casper, the Friendly Ghost", Casper is back at square one with no friends? Why doesn't he have a huge band of friends by the end of the series? Seems like he should have amassed a whole hoard of companions... So, what happens between the end of a particular episode and the start of the next episode?"
Conclusion: As for the claim that I'm being subjective. Here is a line from the Cliche page about theory-based stories and their overall quality: "Lack of evidence to back-up your theories. Not a cliché, just saying, it doesn't make a good story if the concept appears like it wasn't thought out or well-written." I'm sorry, but in the story's current form, this is rushed, has no real evidence to back-up the claims, and feels weak in terms of execution and it fails to meet our quality standards. Feel free to take this to the writer's workshop (link in the deletion message) if you plan on re-writing this or want an opinion from someone other than an admin on the overall quality. I'm tuning down this appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:57, February 23, 2019 (UTC)
How on Earth can you be the one deleting the story and THEN deciding on the merits of the appeal?! Shouldn't that be someone else?? You're playing multiple roles, here. ~~~~
Given that other admins don't tend to answer appeals in a quick manner, I figured I'd explain the issues that were present given that you made no attempts to revise the work in question and your major complaint was that I was failing to be objective when carrying out a quality check on something that has been labeled as an issue for years by other people. However, if you are looking for another opinion, then you can message another admin to weigh in or take your story to the writer's workshop like I stated above. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:58, February 23, 2019 (UTC)

Fireball Studios (DENIED)

Hey Uh, My Story was Deleted and i had followed the rules correctly before beginning and i was wondering can "There Is No Time" be brought back please? Fireball Studios (talk) 15:37, March 18th, 2019 (UTC)

Your story was deleted as it failed to meet our quality standards due to widespread capitalization, wording, and plot issues. As such, I'm turning down this appeal after outlining the issues. I would strongly recommend using the writer's workshop for your next story as you have overlooked a number of basic English errors and your plot could use quite a bit of touching up.
Capitalization: You have a tendency to not capitalize proper nouns. "While i (I) made it into the backroom, i (I) would usually take out my Nintendo Switch to play Super Smash Bros Ultimate, however i (I) didn't feel like playing", "My phone went off as i (I) had got a text message from my mother.", "very bossy about what to do and i (I) had already know my job too well as i had worked for 8 Months prior to her.", etc.
Capitalization issues cont.: You also miss capitalize words. "I made my way into the Bowling Alley (bowling alley) as it was my job as a Night Porter to clean everything up.", "As it stopped after it was a picture of her and my brother at the Amusement Park (amusement park) for the Halloween Haunt without me.", "very bossy about what to do and i had already know my job too well as i had worked for 8 Months (months) prior to her." etc.
Wording: There are numerous run-on sentences here. "I arrived at work looking very almost depressed with my job coach driving me, as last week i asked my boss if i could take a day off on Friday to go do my family tradition with my mother and brother, but she denied this as i had to work on a Friday night.", "It was 7 and my job coach barged into the door and this wasn't usually her as she had started to actually start being very bossy about what to do and i had already know my job too well as i had worked for 8 Months prior to her.", etc.
Awkward wording: "She didn't care about the pain i was suffering to my back as i had to be on my knees and cut open through the tape with a plastic knife.", "After the boxes were hurt, she had stand up and stopped me from doing anymore and started to yell even more.", "Next i had to carry all the boxes that were broken down to the dumpster as my job coach had to yell at me", "I putted all the boxes in the dumpster to where all the other cardboard boxes would go.", etc. I would suggest reading these aloud to yourself and noting areas where the flow is broken and those are generally the areas that need work.
Story: There were other mechanical issues, but a majority of the problems lie in the plot itself. First and foremost, this doesn't feel like a horror story. The protagonist has a bad day and then they kill themselves. There really isn't any focus on building up any sense of tension or horror here.
Story issues cont.: How exactly does this work in a first person story that is being written in real time? "Then i thrust the Knife into the right side of my head piercing it through my skull and brain as a huge chunk of blood flows out of the right side of my head, then i dropped dead on the floor." I'm sorry, but this story doesn't meet our quality standards and requires a drastic re-write. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:59, March 18, 2019 (UTC)

I wish to do a story rewrite (DENIED)

My story, of which I can't remember my old name for it, was deleted because it failed to meet quality standards for a variety of reasons. I was wondering if you would allow me to rewrite the story with the same base characters but with a different plot than the one I had previously. If an admin sees this, I essentially want to recycle my previous characters but with a different storyline to make it a better creepypasta.

LionPrince13 (talk) 05:29, April 30, 2019 (UTC)

Author has failed to cite which of their seven deleted stories they're appealing. Also it should be noted that all their stories were deleted for failing to meet our quality standards, so making an appeal without a revised work or an actual story to review is not a good approach (see header above). EmpyrealInvective (talk) 05:38, April 30, 2019 (UTC)

Clifford The Big Red Dog: Dooms Day (DENIED)

uh my story got deleated but i had little context on what rules i broke so if the admin that did that wants to say why then do so uh i don't really care if it's gone i just want to know why.

—Preceding unsigned comment added by ErrorSansAU (talkcontribs).

Your appeal is denied as your story fails to meet our quality standards. It's also worth noting that I listed the issues on your talk page which I'm just going to list below. There are widespread capitalization, punctuation, spelling, wording, and plot issues.
Capitalization issues: You fail to capitalize "I" numerous times. "The Big Red Dog plushs i had some from the show", " I had them in my basement for a while as i grew out of those shows but that day", "My Clifford The Dog plush staring into my soul, i shivered", etc. You also frequently fail to capitalize sentences. "soon! your (Your) dooms day!", "happen? was those plushs possosed?", "maybe but i will never know.", etc.
Punctuation: You tend to forget how to punctuate sentences and words properly. "But i swear i had a weird dream about those plushes(period missing)", "this isn't a lost ep creepypasta(.) it is around the dolls so don't scream at me okay(,) back to this story.", " i laughed(,/.) i wasn't scared tho it was weird", etc.
Spelling/wording: "i assume you have came to read something that happnd (sic) to me", "I got on a discord call with my best freind (sic) who gave me the plush", "I had a few Clifford The Big Red Dog plushs (sic)", "It stabbed me in the arm atleast (sic) that was what my parents told me in the hostpeltal (sic) because i blacked out". You also frequently have tense shifting issues.
Plot issues: The story is incredibly rushed and very little time is spent to building any real sense of horror or tension. As a result, lines like this: "i asked them why they ended the call but they just send me a picure (picture) of them dead." end up coming off more as comical than your original intention.
Plot issues cont.: This story needs a lot more in way of description and detail to be effective. The final confrontation: "I looked over my shoulder and saw the Clifford Plush with a knife in their paw. It stabbed me in the arm atleast that was what my parents told me in the hostpeltal because i blacked out." comes off more like an afterthought due to any real build-up. Finally, the lack of proof-reading results in a story where there isn't a single sentence in the 20+ that doesn't have an error of some sort. I would strongly suggest reading the quality standards if you're confused as a majority of this was outlined there. Given the issues above, I'm turning down this appeal and advising you use the writer's workshop for your next story as this is a lot of errors to overlook. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:34, May 26, 2019 (UTC)

My Little Dark Pony (DENIED)

Hi I don’t know why my story My Little Dark Pony was deleted. I know that they’re was nothing there but I did not finish it. I just did not know how to save it without putting it out.

Here is the start of my story if you want to see.

Do you ever wonder what happens under Equstria as we know it. If you do then you’re in for a treat. This is a story about what happens in “Under Equstria” where the Pegasus are AI and the Unicorns, Earth Ponies and Alicorns are AI and alive!

Please tell me what went wrong with My Little Dark Pony.

~~~~Kelty Pixel

This wiki does not accept unfinished stories. On top of that, it additionally violates our spinoff rules by using another creator's IP. While I didn't delete your story, those would be two of the likely reasons I'd cite. As for saving it, I would suggest using a word document or Pastebin.com if you don't have access to one. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:19, May 29, 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for telling me the reason why my story My Little Dark Pony was deleted.

Kelty Pixel (talk) 22:49, May 29, 2019 (UTC)Kelty Pixel

Failure to follow appeal ("The cheetah doll") (DENIED)

Can you please put the cheetah doll back up. I worked hard and I did not see any problems and what dose cliche mean? I was about to work on it so please kind s/he (he and she)  can you put it back up? I promise I will improve it

This appeal is automatically denied as the author failed to follow the guidelines above. It's also worth noting if they make the appeal now with the story in its current form, it will be denied as it's riddled with errors and plot issues. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:52, June 6, 2019 (UTC)

Mary's Music Box - Deleted (DENIED)

I wrote the story myself while listening to a 2:30 second song off on youtube and posted it there as a comment, i read the rules and the guidelines for the community, and the reason's why it could be deleted.


I even used a link to the youtube music maker's video to which i wrote it, i also used a spelling and grammar checker which found nothing wrong. I literally had just posted my story, and it was deleted almost instantly!

Here is a copy of it. This time however i am not going to respace it all out, as in the original post it was spaced out properly and as far as i can know it was deleted without clear instructions, only thing i was told was 'There were widespread capitalization, punctuation, run-on sentences, wording, and plot issues. EmpyrealInvective(talk) 12:08, June 22, 2019 (UTC)'

The widespread capitalization was only in moment's where the character was screaming or where their voice had changed to a more demonic darker tone, some horror writers use it as well.

Punctuation that is widespread? As far as i know i used comma's after every proper way, yes sometimes i used them to divide parts of the story to let the reader know to remember that information, it is something most book writers use as well.

Run-on Sentences, you mean like putting those comma's there to keep a line going but allowing the reader rest as the comma is supposed to stand for stop reading for half a second and rest your eyes that time, while a . is supposed to mean to be a few seconds. However when someone uses the "..." behind a line, it is the character either letting the word fall slowly rather then end abrubtly. 

Wording? What do you mean wording? I know the story was written in under an hour but i used very careful words and grammar to make sure it was fitting, not going too heinous with my writing was a part of that.

Plot issue's? What plot issue's were there? It is a mid told story, where the information is given to the reader while also giving them the information ONLY when it is truly needed. —Preceding unsigned comment added by UmbraRex (talkcontribs).

Edit:

I found some slight spelling errors left by the spelling checker, last time i use a website, next time i am just grabbing a dictionary. ​​​​​​

Alright, I am going to go through your points and give them consideration as I review this story. That being said, trying to explain the errors rather than fixing them is not the best approach so I will be turning down this appeal at the end as all of the errors are still present.
"The widespread capitalization was only in moment's where the character was screaming or where their voice had changed to a more demonic darker tone, some horror writers use it as well."
I'm sorry, but you're overlooking a lot of capitalization issues here. Does the dialogue explanation also cover the numerous times you fail to properly capitalize words that need to be capitalized and capitalize words that shouldn't in the writing itself? "i (I) hope the creator would be willing to choose it as the official story for it", "Mary lived with her Mother (mother shouldn't be capitalized here as it's not being used as a proper noun.) and father", "i am sorry, i tried to keep you safe, but they made me kill myself, the voices, i relive", etc. You could try to argue that the errors in dialogue were intentional, but with them peppered throughout the story itself (sometimes even failing to properly capitalize sentences themselves), it doesn't really work as an explanation.
"Punctuation that is widespread? As far as i know i used comma's after every proper way, yes sometimes i used them to divide parts of the story to let the reader know to remember that information, it is something most book writers use as well."
It is very widespread. You attempt to use commas as periods numerous times throughout the story leading to massive run-on sentences that negatively impact the story flow (see below). You also forget to use apostrophes with possessive words. "they heard the girl(')s music box playing", "written in their daughters hand", etc. You also don't use punctuation when introducing dialogue and frequently fail to properly use commas. "the father said(comma/colon missing) "She is our little girl.. we need to help her."", "she sat up and got out of bed and asked.(should be a comma or colon as it's the continuation of a sentence) "D-darling(comma missing) what is wrong?"", "Gerald(comma missing) what are you doing?!", " Mary(,) are you okay?!"", etc.
"Run-on Sentences, you mean like putting those comma's there to keep a line going but allowing the reader rest as the comma is supposed to stand for stop reading for half a second and rest your eyes that time, while a . is supposed to mean to be a few seconds. However when someone uses the "..." behind a line, it is the character either letting the word fall slowly rather then (sic) end abruptly."
A comma signifies a brief pause whereas a period is a full stop. Having sentences that take up the entire paragraph do not work in the story's favor as it impacts the story's flow. Try reading the 'two' sentences I copy/pasted from your story below in a single breath. Here's a guide on run-on sentences to help explain the issue.
"The girl smiled only at day, but she stood outside of her home every day after school,(.) she was a good girl, no one bullied her, but her parents were worried about her,(.) for everyday she stood for tens of minutes outside of their gate, staring at the house looking from room to room,(.) her eyes seemed so dark in those moments, as if life had abandoned her very soul, as if she had nothing to live for,(.) she then almost nearing an hour of time every day started to move, her hands unlocking the gate, and she would enter.," "Mary sat every night on the same carpet floor, rocking back and forth, talking to herself, or was there someone with her, the lock on her room had a cover on it, and her parent's respected her so they did not look, sometimes in the middle of the night they heard the girls music box playing, they wondered why the happy tunes sounded so scary, as if the joy had been taken from it, the tunes turned darker and deeper every night, and sometimes, they could see shadows dancing at their door, but what truly terrified them, was that today, their little girl's voice sounded slightly distorted at night when she knocked on the door.", etc.
"Wording? What do you mean wording? I know the story was written in under an hour but i used very careful words and grammar to make sure it was fitting, not going too heinous with my writing was a part of that."'
I meant awkward wording and grammatical issues in particular. There are a lot of instances of awkward wording here. Please try reading these lines aloud to see how unnaturally they come off: "her white dresses always made her seem like the purest girl of all, but she knew the facade was there, that she lies to everyone, now why would she think that?", "as if she had nothing to live for, she then almost nearing an hour of time every day started to move, her hands unlocking the gate, and she would enter.", "in the dark room there was a fog and a cold air, when they looked around they stood baffled at the door that was supposed to connect to her bathroom", etc. A general rule of thumb is to read your story aloud to yourself and if anything comes off as awkward, stilted, or makes you stumble as you're reading it; then that is what generally needs to be corrected.
Grammatical issues: You tend to misuse it's/its (conjunction it is/possessive) and their/there/they're (their=possessive, there=indicatory, they're=conjunction for they are/were): "the music box sounds it's notes." and "they saw their daughter standing their (there)" are the two most notable. There are also quite a lot of spelling errors here.
"Plot issue's? What plot issue's were there? It is a mid told story, where the information is given to the reader while also giving them the information ONLY when it is truly needed."
The story is incredibly rushed and fails to really build up any sense of tension. The numerous spelling and instances of awkward wording contribute to its hastily told manner. This feels like something that was written in an hour and hastily thrown up without any proof-reading or revising.
Plot inconsistencies: Lines like this: ""Mother, father, i am sorry, i tried to keep you safe, but they made me kill myself, the voices, i relive this with you at the same time, please, find a way to escape."" don't fit with the description of the daughter's death: "their baby girl, strung up with her arms wide and legs crossed into a sickening display, her legs were twisted into a drill like motion and burned together, her chest was bare and the skin was removed, her eyes were gauged out and her fingers removed, she hang there from a gallow, but then they looked at her head, which was covered by something, and then they realised it, it was the head of their female dog". Are you implying she killed herself by stringing herself up, gouging out her eyes, flaying herself, burning herself, and then sewing on the dog head? If so, how?
Issues with the story itself: A lot of this feels like you wrote this all at once and were going from point to point without really telling the story effectively. The ending implies that you want it to be cyclical, but you don't really build off of that so the ending comes off more as an afterthought than an impactful ending.
There are other plot issues, but to be honest, this is getting longer than the story itself so I'm going to cut off the appeal here. I'm sorry, but there are way too many capitalization, punctuation, spelling, grammatical, run-on sentences, and plot issues present to meet the bare minimum of our quality standards. As such, I'm turning down this appeal and suggesting you use the writer's workshop (see link in your talk page) as this is a lot to overlook when writing and if you post another story with this many issues, it will be deleted. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 13:16, June 22, 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for letting me know your a grammar nazi by not even including the way of grammar taught in different languages where we are not all egotistical enough to capitalize the letter I.

Caterina Valentine (DENIED)

My story was deleted due to spelling errors in it and since then I have made sure to read over it and change a lot of things and hopefully corrected the spelling errors as well and would like a second chance at this story being put back up if it is fixed.

~—Preceding unsigned comment added by Ggzz (talkcontribs).

I'm sorry, but there are a large amount of punctuation, capitalization, wording, and story issues result in this failing to meet our quality standards. If you look at my message on your talk page, you'll notice that a lot of the same issues from your previous stories are present here. I would strongly recommend using the writer's workshop for your next story as it's likely to be deleted if you repeat the same errors. In the meantime, I'm going to highlight some of the issues I found which led to me turning down this appeal.
Punctuation issues: You frequently forget to punctuate possessive words. "the psychiatrist was most concerned about was Cats (Cat's) expressions", "The doctor finally came to the conclusion that Cats (Cat's) condition is incurable and is worse like the psychiatrist Thought", etc.
Capitalization errors: You randomly capitalize words. "Cat was troubled as a kid she had social anxiety and Depression (depression) by the age of 15", "She's 19, 2 Years (years) she lived through therapy and none of it worked she also was practicing psychology", "The doctor finally came to the conclusion that Cats condition is incurable and is worse like the psychiatrist Thought (thought)", "The psychiatrist has come to the conclusion that Cat has Borderline (borderline) personality disorder and mild Narcissistic (narcissistic) personality disorder", etc.
Capitalization issues cont.: You tend to improperly capitalize dialogue and sentences. “yes,I (Yes, I) feel like people don’t care about me at times”, "times(.)” now (Now) usually people wouldn’t be so straight forward with this kind of thing"
Awkward wording: "She is portrayed as a sweet girl and she is to people like her, but isn’t to others", "The things she went through with the blood tests and hours in a white padded room, the tingling feeling in her veins or a deep craving in her nails to rip something or the smell of blood, the instinct that she shut away since she was younger has now came back making her crave something, it makes her eyes dilate and her heartbeat.", etc.
Grammar: There=indicatory, their=possessive, they're=they are. "decided to check her to see if their (there) were any scars or cuts which they did find on the bottom of her foot,", "this left the psychiatrist sure that she is depressed but the psychiatrist also thought their (there) might be something else wrong with her.", etc.
Run-on sentences: "Cat was troubled as a kid she had social anxiety and Depression by the age of 15 and was cutting herself, she cut her arm once or twice but most of the damage was on her foot where no one can see it and sooner or later down the road Cat stopped but that drive she had will always be resting inside her", "Cat is now wearing black clothes and has also been developing some strange behavior, she is collecting knives and drawing dark things, she is also curious about the human mind and started to read books on all kinds of psychology like criminology, psychopathology, and forensic psychology which became a huge interest in Cat that she decided to become a psychologist which is worrying.", etc.
Plot issues: The story feels more like a vehicle for your OC than an actual story that's trying to engage with the audience. A large section is told passively when it should be conveyed in the story itself ("Cat is now wearing black clothes and has also been developing some strange behavior, she is collecting knives and drawing dark things, she is also curious about the human mind and started to read books on all kinds of psychology like criminology, psychopathology, and forensic psychology which became a huge interest in Cat that she decided to become a psychologist which is worrying.")
It also needs work on effectively telling the plot. It glosses over a lot ("she lived through therapy and none of it worked she also was practicing psychology just in case even if she never gets out." How is she practicing psychology here?) and feels incredibly rushed towards the end. I'm sorry, but there is a lot of issues here and the plot itself is pretty typical for an OC story. As such, I'm turning down your appeal. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:28, July 18, 2019 (UTC)

The User I Won't Forget (DENIED)

My story was deleted do to not meeting the quality standards. However, i proofread the story and also used Google Docs to look for typos, the grammar wasn't perfect, but a few edits would've fixed i think. Looking through the tropes i shouldn't use, i didn't really notice many cliches in my story. When it comes to capitalization, i'd say it was mostly right, except for usernames mentioned, which don't have to be perfectly capitalized i think. The descriptions were a little short, but there was enough description to get the idea of what the profile photo and intruder looked like, there was even a recreation of what the PFP looked like. I also used the right editor and also used spaces between paragraphs to avoid a wall of text. I also think it was pretty original. That is all.

Written by Imjustthere

Your story is riddled with capitalisation (you never capitalise "I" for some reason - "None of us knew who he was, and i don't know how he found the server, as i only sent the invite to my Twitter followers via DM, i legit have never heard of this guy" <- that's 3 instances in one sentence, but in every single instance where you use I as a pronoun outside of speech, you never capitalise it), you never use punctuation with dialogue correctly (e.g. "He says “that's weird, probably just a troll, still don’t know how he ended up in your server though”" -> you're meant to put dialogue in a new line. It helps make it easy to track who's talking. You're meant to start new dialogue with a capital letter, and put a comma after "says"), run-on sentences ("I had so much on my mind, i didn’t even question where he acquired the drawings, they didn’t look like any creepy kids drawings i’ve seen before, they were also drawn in ink, with random lines that looked like they were drawn with crayons, i’m assuming just to throw me off, but i just kept on asking him how he got into the server"), tense errors, and many many more ("I shut off my mic and send my brother a message on my phone telling him how scared i was…..five minutes, no answer.").
We have our QS for a reason. We use it to try and limit the sheer number of new stories, and make sure that the stories that get through have had a bare minimum amount of effort put into them, and that people have read the rules and looked over their stories for basic errors like not capitalising "I". Mechanically your story falls well below these standards, and shows no sign of even having been proof read. Not only have you failed to notice these numerous errors, but you didn't read the rules regarding the appeal, and posted here without making any effort to fix your story or post to the workshop looking for help. An appeal without any changes made is a default rejection. This information is available at the top of this very page. ChristianWallis (talk) 13:54, July 22, 2019 (UTC)

Glitched Disease (DENIED)

Glitched Disease

Appearently, it somehow got deleted, the creepypasta itself was a mix of a comment and it's 2nd reply, and I made that 2nd reply, the 1st simply said "Oh.", and, it spawned here because I had a feeling of putting it here, just with a few changes, I also mentioned Epilepsy, I think that should be removed, and other reasons, I don't know.

Deletion Appeal done.

I made a Plague Inc. Evolved based creepypasta about something weird happening in the game, it's a merge of two comments (actually 1 comment, and my reply (the 2nd)) in Youtube, and I mentioned epilepsy 2 times, and what other reasons?

I don't know!

Maybe mentioning Epilepsy caused the deletion, or the link address, or a cliche I just used once because the game's still acting weird? I don't even know!

If this gets denied, I'll not get angry, and also, tell me the reason. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Ryeunmigs (talkcontribs).

While I'm not the admin who deleted this story, I can see the issues present which resulted in it failing to meet our quality standards. I would suggest looking over the deletion message Helel left on your talk page as it covers a lot of the reasons why your story was deleted. The main issues are the formatting, the run-on sentences, the story's rushed nature, and issues in execution.
Formatting: While this isn't a huge issue, it's still something that impacts viewership/audience immersion. Your story is a single paragraph that needs to be broken up a bit to help with flow. A typical paragraph is 5-10 sentences in length. This is done to make the story easy to read and improve flow. A story that doesn't do this comes off as blocky.
Run-on sentences: Your entire story is a single run-on sentence that should be broken into multiple sentences. A sentence is a complete thought (for example: "I opened Plague Inc. Evolved on my computer(.)") and is concluded with a period, exclamation point, question mark, or another form of conclusive punctuation. You also need to properly capitalize the start of sentences. I'm not going to include the entire run-on sentence for the sake of space so here's the first part which needs to be properly broken into sentences:
"I opened Plague Inc. Evolved on my computer, I selected Virus because I was bored, the game starts, I looked at the Abilities, but something's different, the only option was named 'Activate", no description, and it costed -1 DNA ..."
The story's rushed nature: The story is very rushed and doesn't really have any build up. It basically opens with the protagonist playing the app and noticing something's going on. There is very little focus on building up what's happening in the story. There's also a lack of conclusion here with the story just ending: "I reopened it again, and it's normal, no anomalies, I was relieved, no crazy -1 DNA costing things, no flashing lights, just normal." This feels like it was written in a single sitting with no proof-reading or revision.
Story issues: There's also a real lack of description that weakens the overall plot. Take this line for example: "suddenly, the counters go haywire, the Healthy, Infected, and Dead counters change rapidly, it's almost like it's gonna give me epilepsy". You don't mention the flashing lights until the second half of the story ("the game goes haywire again, I feel like I have epilepsy, because of the amount of flashing lights"). To properly tell this story, you need to effectively describe what the protagonist is experiencing, seeing, feeling, etc. Give the audience something to relate to so that they can put themselves in the protagonist's shoes.
I'm sorry, but as it currently stands, this story doesn't meet our quality standards. It needs significant revision and since you made this appeal without any revisions, I'm turning down the story outright for the reasons I listed above. A final note, these are the issues I found with the story and might not be the same issues that Helel saw when he decided to delete your story. I would suggest using the writer's workshop (link on your talk page) for your next story as there are a lot of mechanical and plot issues here. Best of luck with your writing in the future. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 14:39, August 31, 2019 (UTC)

The Bloodshot Eye (DENIED)

My story got deleted and I want to know why? My story was called "The Bloodshot Eye". I worked hard on it. Used Grammarly to help. Was it the 2 of the same genres thing cause I messed up.

BlackSpaceBelt (talk) 01:16, September 21, 2019 (UTC) BlackSpaceBelt

Hello. My story "The Nightmare Incident" got deleted and I want to know why it was. I thought it was a good pasta. Please tell me why it was removed and I can try to fix it.    

BlackSpaceBelt (talk) 01:25, September 21, 2019 (UTC)BlackSpaceBelt

As I stated on your talk page, your story was deleted due to numerous punctuation, wording, coding, and plot issues. As you've made no changes or submitted a revised version, I am going to outline the errors I found and turn down this appeal. Additionally since "The Nightmare Incident" has similar plot issues, I'm just going to issue a blanket denial while listing the issues that were prevalent in both and hope someone points out the plot holes in the writer's workshop that I can elaborate on if they go un-reviewed.

Coding issues: While this is a small issue, it can still render text completely unreadable in certain circumstances if you use visual editor instead of source mode. Every line of your story has this coding in editor mode which can make it difficult to edit/seperate from the text of the story: "<p dir="ltr">The Image that was shown to Henry from his son</p>"
Punctuation issues: You frequently forget to introduce dialogue with proper punctuation or use punctuation correctly in dialogue. "She keeps saying(comma/colon missing) “What’s wrong, Henry(question mark missing)”.(punctuation should not be left outside of quotations)", I say(,/:) “I’m having these nightmares of a man with a red-eye appearing(.)”.", etc.
Wording issues: There are frequent instances of awkward wording. "At least I’ve never seen him in the real world since I was young. (Do you mean to say that the protagonist couldn't remember exact details?)", "He keeps staring out my (sic) with that red eye.", "I’ve never got a glimpse of it. I was young when I saw it,", etc. I would suggest reading your story aloud to yourself as a general rule of thumb and working on areas where you stumble or come off sounding awkward.
Plot issues: Here's were a majority of the issues were. There were problems with a real lack of description ti build up the story. A number of lines come off as bland due to not really being descriptive or engaging: "I remember when I was young, my parents took me to Disneyworld. It was the best time ever.", "He keeps staring out my with that red eye. I wake up every time I see it. It was pretty damn scary."
Plot issues cont.: There are also a lot of redundancies in the plot where you restate points to the point that it comes off like story padding. "“The Pale Man” also known as “The Bloodshot Eye”. His eye was bloodshot.", "He has to die and I will kill it. Ok so I killed it,", etc.
Conclusion: The ending is incredibly rushed as well. It feels like you wrote this in an hour and sped through the conclusion to the point that it comes off more like placeholder lines rather than the actual ending. "My wife and son are dead. He has to die and I will kill it. Ok so I killed it, he was so easy. He didn’t even stand a chance.  I hope he is dead otherwise he will come back and kill me." There are other issues in the plot, but I think this is enough to showcase why this appeal is being turned down. I would suggest using the writer's workshop for your next story as there are a lot of issues that need working on here. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:38, September 21, 2019 (UTC)

The communication ritual deleted? (DENIED)}

I have a quick question and that is why does my story keep getting deleted? I checked my grammar and everything but all I get in response from the administrators is "No edit summary given", what does this mean?

As you reuploaded the story without going through the proper channels (making an appeal first or getting admin approval), it was deleted in accordance with our site rules. Additionally as you didn't follow the header above when making this appeal (not using a signature), this appeal is being turned down until you can properly follow the guidelines. On a final note, I would strongly suggest looking over your writer's workshop post as I spotted a lot of issues (in particular, capitalization, punctuation, formatting, wording and plot issues) mentioned in the post that are still present in your story that might impact its approval if you make a proper appeal without correcting these issues. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:39, October 7, 2019 (UTC)


The Christmas Of Terror (DENIED)

An admin deleted this story without any reference to rules I failed to follow. I mean what did I even did wrong? I mean it took hours to write it, only to see it being deleted? I mean, couldn't you just write a message about what annoyed you in the story, so I could change it? Anyway I re-upload the story here (I also re-edit it) and I hope this time it will meet the quality standarts, if not write a comment to tell me what to change. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Vasilios diagoumas (talkcontribs).

As per what I wrote on your talk page "There were widespread capitalization, punctuation, run-on sentences, tense shifting, and plot issues which resulted in your story failing to meet our quality standards.". As you've made no changes, this appeal is being turned down. Additionally, as you re-uploaded it (and were warned against doing so in the past), you are being issued a one day ban. Here is a breakdown of some of the issues I found in your story:
Capitalization: You frequently fail to capitalize proper nouns and randomly capitalize words improperly. "Jack and Michael get in jack's (Jack) car and Jack", " he told me that Pericles was the guy with the santa claus", "slowly walking behind us and then I understand that this was just the Beginning (beginning)", etc.
Punctuation: You frequently use commas where you should be using a period. This creates multiple run-on sentences and negatively impacts the story's flow. "A few minutes later we finally arrived outside of the family's house,(.)", "Jack told us to be quiet,(.)", "we (We) get out of the car and slowly walked towards the door of the house,(.)", "my (My) adrenaline was on top (sic), then I heard a strange sound from an abandoned villa near the family's house,(.), "I told the others about it however Michael told me that it was probably just the wind,(.)", "when Michael tried to open the door, it was locked,(.)", "Michael thought that the family probably hid the key in the garden as no car was on the house, so we all assumed that the family was on the carnival that a city had near our village,(.)", "Michael quickly went to the garden and tried to find a key.", etc.
Run-on sentences: A majority of your sentences are run-on. "Hey! I'am Georgia Mpalafouti, when I was 18 years old, in Decmeber of 1983 me and 2 of my friends Jack and Michael decide to see how would it be if we were going to rob a rich family that was living in the mountain of our village, one night we decided to do it so I, Jack and Michael get in jack's car and Jack (who was driver) started to drive towards the mountain, Michael had bring masks with him so we can wore them and hide our identities in case one of the members of the family were going to see us." and "Michael told us to choose a mask, so Jack stopped the car so we can wore one, I wore a clown mask, Jack wore a Parrot mask and Michael wore a Jester mask, after that Jack started to drive again, I looked out of the window, as I was seeing the snow felling in the ground I felt the feeling of what was going to happen if we actually rob the family, if we managed to do it succesfully, what was going to happen in this case?" are two of the 10+ examples of massive run-on sentences that make up a large portion of your story.
Tense shifting/incorrect tenses: "we quickly runned (ran) away however by now we had already caught the man's attention", "Michael told us to choose a mask, so Jack stopped the car so we can wore (wear) one, I wore a clown mask, Jack wore a Parrot mask and Michael wore a Jester mask", "I looked out of the window, as I was seeing the snow felling in (falling on) the ground", etc. Please note that if English isn't your native language, you may need to enlist the help of someone who is fluent to proof-read your story for you to help with these issues.
Plot issues: The story is incredibly rushed and awkwardly worded throughout. You spend very little time building events and rush from one point to the next without any real attempt to flesh them out. Lines like: "we quickly runned away however by now we had already caught the man's attention, we started to run as he was running after us.After sometime I and Michael thought the man lost us, we decided to go back in the car and get out of this place, however it the night was very dark by now, so Michael didn't really where we were going," need a lot of revision.
Plot issues cont.: Additionally the story needs a lot of work with its description as a lot of it comes off as bland and uninteresting. "A tall man, wearing a gardener's boiler suit and a santa claus mask, was stabbing Michael with his knife repeatedly, we quickly runned away however by now we had already caught the man's attention, we started to run as he was running after us"
Conclusion: There are a lot of other issues here, but given that you didn't really make any changes to your story since you re-uploaded it (the changes you did make were to combine multiple paragraphs together, creating formatting issues), I'm going to cut this short. I would strongly suggest reading messages carefully once your ban expires (in one day) and using the writer's workshop for your next story as there are a lot of issues present here that need to be fixed if you want to post a story on this site. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 18:30, October 25, 2019 (UTC)

My very first gaming creepypasta, Mortal Suicide, got deleted. I have seen why, but I took another look at it and I deleted all the typos and sould be typo free. So please, give me a second chance.

User failed to follow the header above leading to the immediate denial of their appeal until they can properly follow guidelines. Additionally, it's worth noting that typos were not the only issue present (see talk page) and that the plot, wording, punctuation also need revision. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 16:37, November 8, 2019 (UTC)

Caterina Valentine (DENIED)

An admin deleted my page and denied one of my appeals due to bad grammar and community guidelines but I have been working on this remake for a while and have tried my best to make the story and everything else better.

signed Ggzz

As you have not properly followed the deletion appeal header above, this appeal is being turned down until the time you can. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 10:18, November 13, 2019 (UTC)
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