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This is the discussion/coordination section for the second collaborative writing page. Leave your ideas, proposals, suggest rules, reoccurring character synopsis, etc. here. I'll start the ball rolling:

Idea

Let's try to avoid contributions that may pigeon-hole the story or put it into a dead-end. (In other words, finishing your section with the lab/town being burnt to the ground would be a no-no as how will the next writer follow-up the story?) EmpyrealInvective (talk) 16:09, March 29, 2015 (UTC)

Suggestion

Quick suggestion, can we disallow NSFW submissions? The only reason I say this is that it's meant to be a project open to the whole site, and some users won't want to view it/take part if it's unsuitable for minors. Underscorre (talk) 18:48, March 29, 2015 (UTC)

I can get behind that, especially since it's likely the story will end up on the main page and we already have a rule against extreme-NSFW stories being featured. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 18:51, March 29, 2015 (UTC)
How NSFW are we talking here? What all is banned? Furret2000 (talk) 15:07, March 30, 2015 (UTC)
Graphic descriptions of sexual acts. (ie: Something that would be tagged with the NSFW category. Underscorre (talk) 15:47, March 30, 2015 (UTC)

More Ideas

Indigo Valley? How does that sound for the name of the town? Also my character idea  involves a woman named Diana who is trying to find out what happened to her boyfriend. She poses as a scientist and works in the town trying to find him. I would like to write about her. Thoughts? Elliot Cowling (talk) 15:28, March 30, 2015 (UTC)

Sounds good and if no one opposes the name Indigo Valley, I'm alright with it. While we're on the topic, what should the overall purpose of the lab be? What kind of experiments are they performing and what are they hoping to achieve? Maybe something started during at the height of the Red Scare whose funding started out insanely high and due to it being more recent times, maybe they are financially strapped hence their 'unorthodox' methods when it comes to testing. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:02, March 30, 2015 (UTC)
The purpose of the lab could be to create a new type of chemical weapon with the destructive power of a nuclear bomb. A victim of the weapon could have every nerve in their body in intense, flaming pain. It would be an arcane torture. The victims would lose all sense of bodily dimension, seeming as if they had an infinite amount of skin and nerve cells all burning and choking every other sense away from their body as they slowly writhe to their deaths upon the cold, steel floor. All duly recorded in the name of science. Furret2000 (talk) 02:38, March 31, 2015 (UTC)

My idea was that the government are experimenting on humans in order to make creatures of sorts. Or they're doing a variety of tests and experiments, one of which is using Diana's boyfriend for some horrific thing...but what? Elliot Cowling (talk) 07:51, March 31, 2015 (UTC)

I personally like both Empy's and Furret's ideas - and they sound like they could be combined. Underscorre (talk) 08:58, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
If we're doing my idea, would it be too much to ask to have the finale reserved to me? I'd like it to end with the town getting gassed after the secret lab is revealed or something like that. Not demanding, just asking if I can write the ending.Furret2000 (talk) 20:51, April 1, 2015 (UTC)

What about an area where victims of electroshock treatment are wandering around aimlessly? These could be some of the test subjects herded into an area. These could be failed experiments or one on going experiment involving these patients. Elliot Cowling (talk) 12:06, March 31, 2015 (UTC)

I just have a couple of questions...

1. How do the stories end up tying in together if we have no idea who is writing the first, middle, and last parts of the story? I'm sure it actually makes a lot of sense when explained, but I've never entered this before and I need some clarification.

2. Is there a word limit? I didn't happen to notice it specified anywhere, but just in case I missed something...

3. Finally, we're allowed to post our works in progress in the WW, aren't we? Just double checking :)

Natalo (talk) 10:26, March 31, 2015 (UTC)

1: with the previous one, I do not believe that we had set someone in charge or writing the intro and conclusion. (I think it was a "first come, first serve" sort of deal.) I am currently waiting to see the tone of the story and for some more background information to get built-up. 2. there isn't a word limit, but take into account that multiple people are going to be (hopefully) adding sections so you may not want to write out a novella. 3. Of course you can take your section to the WW. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 11:57, March 31, 2015 (UTC)

Time Limitation?

I didn't see a time limit for this collab. The previous one had a time limit of two months, which added a sense of urgency to get your section in the story, also it gave a discernable time to discontinue the project. Is it two months, same as last time? Or is it something different? Ameagle (talk) 23:18, March 31, 2015 (UTC) 

It's basically the same rules and restrictions that the first collaborative project had. So it should be wrapped up by the end of May as it went live (let's just round up to June). EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:10, April 1, 2015 (UTC)

Posting

Can someone please clarify where we post our completed stories? Do we post them here, or on the page? --The Greatest Stories Are Never Told, CrazyWords 22:45, April 2, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords

Post it here. Just remember to include a title header. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:16, April 2, 2015 (UTC)
Can we make a rule that it has to be posted here or on a different page before it gets put on the actual thing? This would be to avoid having to go in and remove a terrible story or one that ruins the story. Furret2000 (talk) 23:31, April 2, 2015 (UTC)
Removing a story really isn't that hard. Additionally if it were posted here, it would be even harder to separate ideas and proposals from stories themselves. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:37, April 2, 2015 (UTC)

Ideas Redux

So, what I had in mind was that the facility could be for a variety of different topics. Anything from robotics and aliens to parallel universes and time travel. Trying to make the facility about one thing might stunt us creatively. We could, however, write a reason as to WHY the facility was created. Maybe they were trying to get an edge on the Russians in the cold war. Maybe there's some unspeakable horror that humanity has to prepare for. Maybe they did it as a back up plan in case anything went wrong.  --The Damn Batman (talk) 02:25, April 3, 2015 (UTC)

Yeah, that was what I was thinking of in my message above. A lot of different research fields, but a solid reason for why. I think old Cold War bullshit would offer a good opportunity for some slight humor to accentuate the horror. Especially if it is set in modern times and they are still focused on dealing with the long-dead Red scare. (bureaucracy!) EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:29, April 3, 2015 (UTC)
Yeah, maybe we could say that they got false intel about a huge Russian fleet of supernatural beings, extraterrestrials, androids, etc. and the U.S. hastily throw together a facility where they experiment on things and concept they can barely comprehend, let alone contain, and in doing so, they ended up making a town of heavily brainwashed sleeper agents, who they experiment on and mind wipe (mind wipe maybe also affects their mental state?). Maybe adding in some flash backs to the facility's founding and maybe even some tales from it's past. --The Damn Batman (talk) 02:37, April 3, 2015 (UTC)
Damn, that's a good idea! I'm gonna try to get mine going once we have a few more submissions and I have a feel for how to proceed. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:38, April 3, 2015 (UTC)

I'd like to write a section involving victims of electroshock treatment wandering around or maybe an area of the base where creatures thrive because they killed the staff. Elliot Cowling (talk) 22:23, April 3, 2015 (UTC)

Those are some good ideas. We could make it out to be a lost region of the facility... perhaps we can call it "The Pen". Maybe it was an actually functioning region of the facility, but got lost years ago, and now it's used as a place to put all the creatures or things that they can't kill or contain. Expanding on your electroshock therapy thing too, maybe they use clones or residents of the town who've been basically lobotomized (via electroshock) or disfigured to feed the creatures. Just some suggestions from the top of my head.  The Damn Batman (talk) 02:57, April 4, 2015 (UTC)

POV?

I think I heard someone talk about this before, but I just wanted it cleared up before I started writing. Have we agreed on a set point of view/ format of the story? Is it first person or third person? Ameagle (talk) 15:15, April 3, 2015 (UTC)

It can change in each section, so just write in what makes sense for you (I think).
Underscorre (talk) 15:20, April 3, 2015 (UTC)

I posted it

I posted my story. I think that's where you you post it. I don't need it to go first, but I would like it in there. Thanks! --Fear is always growing. 19:59, April 4, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords

I've also posted my submission. I haven't written anything in ages, so it's probably pretty shitty, but why not? It's based on the ideas of Batman & Elliot. « UnderScorre » 21:11, April 4, 2015 (UTC)
Shouldn't CrazyWords' submission have a header? MrDupin (talk) 21:14, April 4, 2015 (UTC)
I guess so. I just added one for neatness later on down the line. CrazyWords, could you add a header to your submission?
« UnderScorre » 21:16, April 4, 2015 (UTC)

Introducing the story

I was wondering how we would go about setting up the story. I was thinking I could write the intro to the story to try and basically explain some of the ideas we had earlier through the lens of a new employee learning the ropes of the facility. Or maybe we could try and go the ominous route and drop subtle hints. Any thoughts? The Damn Batman (talk) 23:42, April 4, 2015 (UTC)

I agree either you or Empy should write the intro, since both of you have probably contributed the most to the overall theme of the pasta. I also think that the "subtle hints" approach would probably be more effective creepiness-wise, however I think the former suggestion would be a better idea, as there are quite a few ideas we need to make sure are understood for the thing to make sense.
« UnderScorre » 19:41, April 5, 2015 (UTC)

Story + CharactersSo

So this is the story I wrote:

"Indigo Falls"

The last words out of Tim's mouth had no immediate impact upon the minds of the board meeting.  Despite this, those words would serve as the conduit of despair for the town in question for the next several years.

An ordinary suit named Jack replied, "Indigo Falls?  What would we have to gain by building there?"

Tim said, "Well, it's a shit logging town in the middle of nowhere.  Nobody will suspect a thing if we build there."

"Exactly.  It's shit.  We would have little to no contact with the outside world, no way to stay under the radar of local gossipers, and a limited number of subjects to pull from before people started getting suspicious."

Another man named Alan countered, "We can make the town grow if we need it to.  Sounds good to me; I think we should go with it."

Jack said, "Are you people out of your fucking minds?  We're just going to accept whatever this asshole says as fact?"

A lady named Josephine blurted, "I don't see you coming up with any ideas, Jack."

The room was silent for a while.  Each of the twelve there was lost in thought, planning their next words when the man at the head of the table spoke.  "Well, if it's ok with you all I'd like to move to a vote on the location of Indigo Falls, Maine.  All those in favor raise your hand."  Eleven of the attendees raised their hand.  Alan said, "Even you, Sid?"

The man at the head of the table replied, "Yes, even me.  All opposed?"

Alan alone raised his hand.

"Well it's decided then.  Tim, what's the number for Indigo Falls' mayoral office?" said Sid.

"207-559-8127"


Sid dialed the number into his phone.  He said, "This is the FDA, get me the mayor of Indigo Falls."

I also want to propose a character of Alan along with an entire backstory for the town.  He was born and raised in Indigo Falls and later became a high level official for the FDA.  Upon the lab's creation he, along with a number of others including Josephine, had his memories of the FDA erased so he thought he had lived in Indigo Falls his whole life.

If this doesn't ruin the story, I will go ahead and post it.

Well we're still working on the back story a bit, but scroll up to Ideas Redux, where we basically set it up as a lab created in the cold war. There's already a character named Josiphine in the story, so her being mind wiped would actually fit into the story. It might go along with what we were doing, so I'd say go ahead and post it... maybe change FDA to CIA? The Damn Batman (talk) 01:07, April 5, 2015 (UTC)

The Josephine is the same one that is already in it. I'll go ahead and post it, but if people feel it ruins the story, go ahead and remove it.Furret2000 (talk) 01:33, April 5, 2015 (UTC)

Diana

So I just wrote a part and posted it on the page called "Diana's paranoia." Now I set her up so she is the one in charge of operations in Indigo Falls but this does not have to be the case. She could be a rich woman who lives in the town and simply manipulates the town's operations. Anyway I hope you all like it. I am going to write more sections on her. I also included the character Jim from Jim's diner if that's okay with everybody. Any problems please do tell me.

Elliot Cowling (talk) 16:20, April 5, 2015 (UTC)

I read it over, it was pretty good and it still fits into the story. 

The Damn Batman (talk) 19:09, April 5, 2015 (UTC)


Quick Questions

Hey guys, I'd love to contribute but have a few questions first. Do we have a set time period yet (Or an idea of one)? Curious what technology we have access to and whether I can make references to MKUltra. Also curious as to the focus of these pieces; they seem to be on the researchers rather than the inhabitants (At least at the time of me asking). Is that what we want to do? Or do we want a mix of both? Also as a suggestion, can we try to keep each experiment "purposeful"? I personally don't like evil scientists doing evil things for the sake of being evil. I think each experiment should have some alluded to purpose, however flawed or miniscule it may be. That way we don't have torture or meaningless deaths; everything should (At least in the researchers' eyes) have some meaning. Just my thoughts. Whitix (talk) 00:27, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

I would say that it should be left open. If you want to set it during the facility's construction, you can or in modern times. If you want to write from a 'volunteer's' perspective, or a scientist's, you can. I agree that there should be a background/purpose for the experiments and not just have it devolve into senseless brutality. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:37, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

1500 words?

Just a really quick question here. Can I post a story that is 1500 words long? I know most of the entries are really short, and I can cut it down to maybe 1000 if I really had to. I was just wondering if a story of that length would be allowed. Thanks,

Natalo (talk) 06:37, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

~1200 would be optimal in my eyes, but I don't see any major issue with you doing a 1500 word one.
« UnderScorre » 11:41, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

Great, thank you! I'll cut it down a bit :) Natalo (talk) 13:23, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

A Question On Time

I was just wondering if we had solid dates for when the town was first established and on what date it was destroyed/abandoned/however it ends (in the case that the town is destroyed or abandoned). This would be a good thing to finalise for research purposes (like researching the time period) and to create realistic dating on documents, letters, etc.

Oaura (talk) 11:34, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

From what I can see above, the place was initially founded in the cold war (so '60s to late '80s).


« UnderScorre » 11:47, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

Cool! Thanks for the clarification.

Oaura (talk) 11:52, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

In my story I state that the facility goes back to 1942 at least :) Elliot Cowling (talk) 15:56, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

Multiple Stories?

Can I write another story later, or is the one that I posted going to be the only one I post? Furret2000 (talk) 13:04, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

Wait until a few more users have posted their contributions. You can always adapt your original one.
« UnderScorre » 15:03, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

Possible Plot Hole?

Hey, so I've been thinking about how to fix a plot hole I think is present in the story; that is, if all these people keep dying or disappearing from these experiments, how come nobody notices? I mean, from Crazy Word's story alone, there an implied eight inhabitant deaths, Josephine dies in Underscorres's story, and Alexia plus Lucinda both die in Natalo's story. I think some people would take notice. Maybe in later stories they will notice, but for now, it seems like it happens far too often to simply pass off. I was wondering if anyone cares how I go about "fixing" this "issue". Do you think the inhabitants should be simply conditioned to docile and unquestioning (Through subliminal messages or perhaps leaked drugs in the water supply)? Or perhaps missing inhabitants are replaced by a "Human Replacement Resources" section in the facility (Perhaps through cloning or maybe synthetic uncanny valley-ish androids). Either of these may have drastic influences later on in the story, so I wanted to see if anyone had any preferences before I go ahead, Whitix (talk) 20:24, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

I prefer the cloning/androids idea, but I have no problem with you writing either of them. See below.
« UnderScorre » 20:26, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
I think that the town should be in a state of blissful ignorance reinforced by Scopalamine in the water supply. Basically Scopalamine makes you very susceptible to suggestion. Just another idea. Furret2000 (talk) 20:33, April 6, 2015 (UTC)
Actually, yeah, scopalamine would make more sense. And at that time MK ULTRA was experimenting with trying to control people (although they used LSD) so it makes sense in context.
« UnderScorre » 20:35, April 6, 2015 (UTC)

I think the plot hole is still there though. The town would eventually run out of inhabitants, so how would we go about explaining how they'd have an unlimited supply of test subjects? --The Damn Batman (talk) 10:28, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

I covered that in my story. "We can make the town grow if we want to" Furret2000 (talk) 22:13, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

Hey, been awhile since I posted here (kind of forgt about this); has anyone explicitly stated what makes these people so docile? I don't like the Scopalamine idea mostly because it seems rather standard for an evil government project. Is it cool if I write a section about some giant fungus that dampens people's minds through spores? I think they'd use humans to grow as lab cultures or something. Is that cool with the rest of you guys? Doesn't screw anything up in the plot? Whitix (talk) 01:10, May 12, 2015 (UTC)

I wrote a thing

This is my current project.  The first story I posted was really more of a warm up.  This is my real thing.

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:449052

I just wanted to get people's approval on this since it kind of fucks with everything that has been established in the story so far. Furret2000 (talk) 22:55, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

Could this intelligent being actually be a hallucination? Maybe Diana was drugged with one of her own drugs that she uses for tests? I think this being suddenly taking over could work if we still have complete creative control over our characters and not let the being dominate our sections. Thats why I'm suggesting that it could be a hallucination because it is a rather big occurrence in the story. Elliot Cowling (talk) 23:26, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

I don't think it would have that big an impact on the individual stories, just the overall plot.  Also, I forgot to mention I'm not going to be posting this any time soon.  Maybe in a few weeks.  I just posted it now so people could know that I'm going to post this later if it's OK.  So to answer your question, it's not a hallucination but this is going to be near the end of the story so it should be fine. Furret2000 (talk) 02:08, April 8, 2015 (UTC)

Ok man cool :) Elliot Cowling (talk) 10:13, April 8, 2015 (UTC)

Also in 'Diana's Paranoia' I mention that a woman moved into a street called Violet Road and seemed particularly interested in the sewers outside her house. Diana doesn't want her finding out what is below there...but what IS below there? It could possibly be the intelligent being, only Diana doesn't know what it's capable of yet...just an idea :) Elliot Cowling (talk) 12:51, April 8, 2015 (UTC)

Sorry about the monologues I keep writing haha. Basically these are my thoughts.

1. I don't think all the victims in The Pen should be plotting to escape. I think the intelligent creature could be plotting and possibly worked with Sid before he let the creature out. I think The Pen's victims should still be as they are. Electroshocked and mutated. 2. I would drop the name 'Judgment Day' because of Terminator ;)

So yeah. Just my thoughts. Thats what I would consider. Apologies for the paragraphs haha :) Elliot Cowling (talk) 13:07, April 8, 2015 (UTC)

Ok, I think I'll drop the name and keep the victims lobotomized. It's Alan that let the creature out, not Sid btw. Furret2000 (talk) 21:57, April 12, 2015 (UTC)

Goes up this Friday.  Finish ye stories that will take place before this.Furret2000 (talk) 20:59, May 6, 2015 (UTC)

Question On How To Post

So, this is kind of embarrassing (or maybe even has an obvious answer). By any chance, would anyone be able to direct me on how to add a part to the project? Sorry to be a bother, it turns out I am not very good at this kind of thing. Oaura (talk) 08:12, April 21, 2015 (UTC)

You just press "edit" at the top right of the page, scroll to the bottom, create a new section (I'll write how to in a second) and paste in your story after the header. Then add By-user to the bottom. To create a new section, you just create a new header, which you do so by typing the following:
== Section Title Goes Here==
« UnderScorre » 09:40, April 21, 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the help! It is very much appreciated. Oaura (talk) 09:59, April 21, 2015 (UTC)

What country?

I wonder what country it is set. Not Russia, US, or any superpowered countries, it will appear cliched.


Hikage Makoru (talk) 13:57, April 21, 2015 (UTC)

Actually, I believe it is the US, as the whole thing is based around their reaction to the cold war. How is setting a story in one of those countries cliched? « UnderScorre » 14:40, April 21, 2015 (UTC)
It's in the US already. Maine, I believe.Furret2000 (talk) 01:47, April 25, 2015 (UTC)

Are We Done?

I noticed no one has posted on this for a while, and I think it's long enough. So is it done? Thanks!

I'm CrazyWords, I love you all! Talk to me Baby! Contributions! 01:08, May 5, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords

There is still time left (End of this month) and I have another section I am writing. Additionally I would like to fish for ideas to see if anyone has any ideas for a conclusive ending as Meet the Cast really seemed like an anthology with no overarching plot/conclusion. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:12, May 5, 2015 (UTC)
I do. What if an experiment goes wrong, and forces them to move away? The experiment would likely be something radioactive, or something that involves radiation. I don't think them dying would be satisfying. I could even write it. I wrote the first section, after all. I'm CrazyWords, I love you all! Talk to me Baby! Contributions! 01:20, May 5, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords
It seems unfair that the first person to write also wraps up the story. I would rather put it to a vote based on the the author's merits and work together (or collaborate as the project title says) to wrap up the story. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:25, May 5, 2015 (UTC)
Yea, but we're/your going to have to bring attention to this... Highlight it? I'm CrazyWords, I love you all! Talk to me Baby! Contributions! 01:28, May 5, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords
Project pages cannot be highlighted. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:30, May 5, 2015 (UTC)
Oh dear. I'm also adding another section, though. I'm CrazyWords, I love you all! Talk to me Baby! Contributions! 01:38, May 5, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords
There are some pretty fair points here, honestly, I like the idea of working out how this story will end. That way it may be easier for contributors to work towards it. Oaura (talk) 08:06, May 5, 2015 (UTC)

New kid question

Hello, I recently found out about this project, and when I say recently I mean last week. So... I've been reading this collab writing project, and HOT DANG! I've really been enjoying this project and I want to ask, may I please join in? I've been working on an entry, and I'm not sure if I need to ask to submit it for this thing. Yeah, I'm a new kid, still learning the ropes around here. HardyGal (talk) 07:00, May 9, 2015 (UTC)

The project is open to all, although your entry does need to be up to quality standards and follow the rules outlined above. Let me know if you have any questions. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 07:02, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
The more the merrier! Feel free to post your entry on the Writer's Workshop if you need anyone to proofread it. I'd be happy to help out, just shoot me a message on my talk page if you need a proofreader :) Oaura (talk) 08:08, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
Oh! Oh, tremendous! Thank you! I'm almost finished with the project. HardyGal (talk) 08:09, May 12, 2015 (UTC)
That's great! I can't wait to read it. Oaura (talk) 22:27, May 14, 2015 (UTC)
So, I published my project. Feel completely free to edit it, refine it, and so on. If it's too... well, not good, that's fine. Some advice would be slick. HardyGal (talk) 09:12, May 15, 2015 (UTC)

Endgame

We are about three weeks away from the conclusion of this project (June 1st, 2015) and have seen a lot of good content submitted and are bound to see more in the final weeks. I would like to do something a bit different from Meet the Cast, which was a collection of stories, but it was lacking a conclusive ending. I think we should talk amongst ourselves and try to come up with an ending. (It doesn't have to be conclusive like the liquidation of the lab, but I think some sort of resolution/overview ending would tie up the story nicely.) Once we have an idea, we can nominate one of the previous contributors to write it out. Any ideas/suggestions? EmpyrealInvective (talk) 14:10, May 9, 2015 (UTC)

I know I've said this before, but what if we have everyone move away because of a failed experiment? I think that would tie it up much nicer than everyone dying. As for people to write it, I nominate Natalo. I think her/his entry was amazing. I'm CrazyWords, I love you all! Talk to me Baby! Contributions! 16:01, May 9, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords
To be honest, after reading the story so far I'm starting to think that the town and, by extension, the facility shouldn't be destroyed. Maybe the facility will be kept secret, preparing for a war that may or may not come. Or maybe the facility could even become disbanded and, as generations pass, the facility is forgotten and a few escaped experiments that still roam/remain in the town are shared around as fictional ghost stories. I'm not saying that everything shouldn't be destroyed, I'm just saying that the story doesn't really feel like it's going in that particular direction (and also, for some reason I can't place, the destruction thing feels like it's been done before). Oaura (talk) 02:53, May 10, 2015 (UTC)

Cleaner Protocol

Since I mentioned it in my story, I thought I should just outline what the 'Cleaner Protocol' is.  The monster in Apex of Ruin is a prototype for a breed of soldiers that will be enhanced using all of what the lab has created.  Cleaner Protocol is where the soldiers are unleased upon the town for a final test run.  Of course this is all open to change and suggestion. Furret2000 (talk) 18:40, May 11, 2015 (UTC)

I've removed your submission, as it really messes with everything we've got so far. Correct me if I'm wrong, but the pen is basically destroyed in your submission? Please see #Endgame. « UnderScorre » 18:51, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
1. The story is Tarantinoesque in that it jumps stories and timelines at a moments notice, so my story doesn't inhibit on anyone's ability to post their stories. 2. Why didn't you tell me that when I said I was going to post it? 3. Am I blacklisted from ever posting this story or do I just have to wait until the last week of the collab or something? Furret2000 (talk) 20:27, May 11, 2015 (UTC)
  1. Read #Idea. It's true that the story jumps around in time a little, but there's only one timeline, and your story pretty much wraps up that timeline.
  2. TBH I didn't see you say you were going to post it, nor did I know anything about the content of what was going to be posted before you posted it. My bad. Mind linking to where you explaind this?
  3. No. From what I can see above, someone who's contributed to the thing will be nominated to finish the thing. If you were nominated, you could rework your piece to be the ending. Or, if you weren't, you could talk with the person who would be writing the ending and see if you could come to an agreement on your story being included.
« UnderScorre » 21:14, May 11, 2015 (UTC)

New Section

Hey, so I realize that the story I wrote is about twice as long as most of the others. Should I split it up into two parts for better comparison? And if so, does anyone have a suggestion as to where? Whitix (talk) 02:32, May 15, 2015 (UTC)

Endgame: The Re-Reckoning

The end of the collaborative project is two weeks away and we really haven't hashed out how we want to wrap it up or who we want to handle this. I'll get the ball rolling. I think Elliot Cowling or Whitix would do a great job handling the ending based on their submissions and their other stories. Please recommend other authors and at the end of the week, we will select the one with the most support and they can choose one of the ideas mentioned below. (Not going to make a poll as my opinion of polls are currently soured.)

As for endings, I did not mean to imply that it the story has to end with the lab being destroyed, closed, or invaded. One thing I didn't like about the first collaborative project was that there really was no ending/summation. (It feels unfinished.) Even something as simple as implying that the lab will continue to perform these experiments and their flawed containment protocols will result in more abominations being unleashed on the world could work. Let's wrap this thing up neatly. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:32, May 16, 2015 (UTC)

First off, I'd love to write the ending. Second, regardless of whoever is chosen to write it, can we agree not to introduce any characters or experiments that aren't in the previous stories? I don't think the entire facility should be thrown into chaos because of a "new" lab project; the ending should ideally use a combination of the characters and experiments from most of the existing stories. Like, there really shouldn't be an experiment on wormhole technology that results in the entire lab being sucked into an abyss, nor should "Dave the tech guy" become mutated and take over the facility. It should really have something to do with the lab's failures and infighting catching up with them and culminating in its demise or its rebirth. Just my thoughts. Whitix (talk) 20:55, May 16, 2015 (UTC)
I would love to write the ending also. I'm not sure about the idea where the town gets destroyed either. I have a couple ideas I could throw into the mix and play around with :) Elliot Cowling (talk) 22:26, May 16, 2015 (UTC)
Please do. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:27, May 16, 2015 (UTC)
So we've got about a week left. Is it time to actually get serious about the ending? As for endings, I've only got a few general ideas right now. While I don't think the facility should be destroyed, I do think we need a climax of sorts. We can't just have the facility proceed without incident; there should be some final culmination of chaos using the previous stories. I kind of like the idea that the facility is abandoned, either through force (the experiments go out of control) or by necessity (budget cuts because the facility can't produce anything useful. Of course, with the researchers introduced, it seems like a few of them would try and make a power grab, maybe this leads to the facility's downfall? I also kinda of like the idea of an epilogue of sorts (or the actual ending) where a group of people stumble upon and subsequently pick through the deserted town and facility. That way the reason why the town was abandoned could be ambiguous or directly known through final reports. Just some ideas. Whitix (talk) 18:28, May 23, 2015 (UTC)

Voting

This section is to nominate someone to be in charge of the final section. Unfortunately this slipped away from me with making my own contest (sorry about that) so the nomination voting period will be brief and will wrap up on Monday night. (I may close the thread the first and the person we designate can complete the final section at their leisure. Include your nominations below and the person with the most support/seems best qualified/interested in writing the final section will be informed.

I'll kick this off, I nominate Whitix to write the final section. They've contributed a lot to this collaborative project, their sections are well-written, and they have an interesting endgame in mind. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:38, May 23, 2015 (UTC)
I agree with Whitix writing the last section. « UnderScorre » 19:40, May 23, 2015 (UTC)

Regarding the Newest Section

I don't want this to come across as an attack on the author. I know this is a collaborative project, but I feel the "New Employee" section creates some problems for the rest of the project. While personally, I see many issues with the story, I won't touch on anything that doesn't affect the project as a whole.

It reveals too much; we don't want to outright state the purpose of the facility, nor do we want it to say these "rules", as they dampen the vague and mysteriousness of the facility. I also quite dislike the idea that everyone in the facility is under constant surveillance and mind control; these people should have free will to do as they please. That part even contradicts the whole "do whatever you want part" while invalidating a lot of the previous stories. Half the other stories already submitted wouldn't exist or would have some part of them invalidated if this facility directly mind-controlled people. This line: "You’ve got free reign to do whatever the hell you want..." suggests that these experiments are without some larger purpose. That bothers me because it would seem that a great deal of these experiments are needlessly performed; there should be something tying them all together, not having the leader telling the workers to "have fun".

I won't ramble on too much more. Does anyone else think these are issues or am I out of place? Whitix (talk) 22:54, May 16, 2015 (UTC)

I don't think you're out of place, however, neither do I believe the story should be deleted. It just needs to be elaborated on more and tweaked to a certain degree. The idea of introducing the procedure behind new employees was a good one. I do see your point about how this story compromises the validity of the others though. I'm fence-sitting on this one. From this story, I kind of get the impression that the rules are used as a morale boost (specifically the one that says 'have fun'), and not specifically the exact laws of the facility. Oaura (talk) 01:18, May 17, 2015 (UTC)
I agree with Whitix about the fact that all the personnel not having free will does limit the other characters stories completely because we wrote them as if they had free will of course. This means our character's motives and objectives were all controlled and not their personality, so I understand what Whitix is saying totally. Also, my opinion about the experiments is that they should be individual and not all of them for a 'larger purpose' because all the experiments we wrote has to adhere to this point otherwise. Elliot Cowling (talk) 08:26, May 17, 2015 (UTC)
I'm really sorry, I just had no idea how to end the story. I'll go back and change the ending and maybe fix a few more things. Again, my bad, guys. The Damn Batman (talk) 13:43, May 17, 2015 (UTC)

Conclusion

I think that it's time we come up with a conclusion, this is just my option. I would like to nominate authors to write it. I believe it's long enough. If we are going to nominate people, I nominate Natalo. Thanks! Da Dancing Mudkipper Says: So you think you can dance!? (CrazyWords) 00:29, May 31, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords

Ending...?

So, I'm not sure if I really had the go ahead to write the ending, but I had the support of two admins, and that was good enough for me. I've posted what I came up with already, but if there are any issues with it, feel free to remove it if you deem it necessary. I tried to reference every story that came prior to it in some way (Some were more difficult than others). If you feel like I misused or underused your character or story and have a suggestion as to how to further tweak it, please let me know. I wrote this in one five hour sitting, so if it seems a bit sloppy or abrupt, please let me know. I did use my characters a bit more than others, and that's due to my writing bias, so let me know if you think I'm being unfair. I realize it isn't the creepiest thing ever (And it's a bit long), but I feel it brings a nice closure to the story. Hope it's a satisfiable conclusion to an awesome series! Whitix (talk) 22:29, May 31, 2015 (UTC)

I love it, thanks Whitix! You should probably re-name it though. Da Dancing Mudkipper Says: So you think you can dance!? (CrazyWords) 23:01, May 31, 2015 (UTC)CrazyWords
Glad to hear you enjoy it! Is there a particular reason I should rename it? I thought it fit nicely with the rest of the short named sections. Whitix (talk) 03:42, June 1, 2015 (UTC)
I enjoyed it as well. Its a nice conclusion to the story. I don't really see any problem with the title, so I'd say keep it. The Damn Batman (talk) 15:06, June 7, 2015 (UTC)

Title

I will be making a page shortly (I still want to do some minor checks on the story.), but there is one last thing to decide. What do we name the beast? It could be something simple like the name of town "Indigo Falls" or if someone has any other suggestion, it will be welcomed. Remember this is going up on the front page (for a month) so pats on the back to everyone who participated. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:23, June 1, 2015 (UTC)

Welp, a couple days have passed without much feedback here. I'd like to give this thing a title and get it up on the main page. Not to press the clock, but if we don't get any suggestions in the next few days, I'm just going to name it "Indigo Falls" and post it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 03:42, June 7, 2015 (UTC)
I think Indigo Falls would be fine. Considering the pasta's episodic nature, it'd be kinda hard to find anything else that actually relates to every entry. The Damn Batman (talk) 14:58, June 7, 2015 (UTC)
Yeah I think Indigo Falls is fine. As Batman says it is hard to find anything relating to ALL of the sections so I'm happy with Indigo Falls. :) Elliot Cowling (talk) 18:02, June 7, 2015 (UTC)
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