Jarithes The Flesh Queen[]
So i made this Creepypasta a few months ago inspired by a dream i had and i decided to post it yesterday, but it didnt met the standards of quality for this Wiki. Let me know what you think and how can i improve it to post it again.
Stop-motion/puppet movies can be weird, i know, i had tons of memories and dreams about seeing here or there, something that makes me feel strange, or even downright terrify me. "Chainsaw Maid", "Dont Hug Me Im Scared", and tons of other examples of creepy movies made in that kind of style. Odd, and creepy for sure.
However, i remember once seeing this movie called "Jarithes The Flesh Queen" that i somewhat remember my mother telling me it was an "educational" movie about life and its most integral parts, that it was a movie about "Life". It was seemingly, or supposedly, made for kids but you know not everything made for kids is necessarily gonna be nice-looking or innocent, like i cluelessly thought when i watched it.
I remember the movie being about flesh. organs, fetuses i think, all conviving inside a gigantic rib cage or chest that had a huge hole in it where you can see some big lungs and a giant beating heart hanging from the "ceiling" of the place, not that i could see any ceiling, actually, as it was really obscured up there, like a void or black hole.
Now the "fetuses" looked more like skinless, deformed people (whose puppets were detailed and shiny) all celebrating and partying inside the rib cage. I specifically remember being myself in that party, in that warm yet cold, strange place, looking perturbed at those strange, fleshy beings with their huge shiny but dry eyes, giant heads and with a body complexion that looked as though they were about to fall apart, cheering and celebrating the arrival of "Jarithes", the Queen. They were all much taller than me, and i didnt think they really noticed me in there.
I remember after seeing this movie, i looked it up on the internet, and i remember finding that it was some sort of "experimental" film made by a supposedly famous director/screenplayer that i dont remember his name.
When i woke up, i remember trying to find this supposed movie on Google, only to find nothing, as if it was all just a dream, wich probably was, and it better be. However i can swear that it existed, or at least something similar to what i saw on my dream.
I remember seeing stuff similar to this dream i had about flesh and being in giant spaces made of meat, very disturbing indeed. This movie "Jarithes, The Flesh Queen" does not exist, but i am a hundred per cent sure that there exist things like this, about flesh and fetuses, organs, i know because i have seen it. MARUOSA-ACA, MUSCLE SPARK, SNUFF Puppets and that Womb level from the game The Binding of Isaac, are just a few examples of this kind of disturbing, eerie imagery that has been fledged into my mind for years.
These kind of dreams are frequent to me, very fever and psychedelic, and generally about things that i myself find disturbing. I´m just hoping i don´t have to dream about "Jarithes" anymore.
This kind of things really affect me, and i don{t really know why. It´s probably the thought of flesh and living tissue in general that sends this strange odd feeling down my spine, probably originating back to when i used to watch slaughterhouse/animal cruelty videos when i was very young, which is possibly what originated this sense of uneasiness on me about all of these.
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William See (talk) 21:52, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[]
"Stop-motion/puppet movies can be weird, i know, i had tons of memories and dreams about seeing here or there, something that makes me feel strange, or even downright terrify me." --> This sentence is a run on, which can be fixed by replacing commas with periods at appropriate points. (ex: "Stop-motion/puppet movies can be weird. [I] know, [I] had tons of memories and dreams about seeing something [here or there] that makes me feel strange, or even downright terrify me.") Notice that I also fixed the capitalization errors and the syntax of "here or there": remember that all proper nouns (places, people) are capitalized unless specified otherwise.
Lines such as "It was seemingly, or supposedly, made for kids but you know not everything made for kids is necessarily gonna be nice-looking or innocent" can do without the redundant statements such as "seemingly, or supposedly". One will do if it gets the point across, and keeps the idea concise.
"I remember the move being about flesh. organs, fetuses i think, all conviving inside a gigantic rib cage or chest that had a huge hole in it where you can see some big lungs and a giant beating heart hanging from the "ceiling" of the place, not that i could see any ceiling, actually, as it was really obscured up there, like a void or black hole." Where did the narrator view this film? What is the context for describing these details, and how did the mother miss these supposedly disturbing elements? Its believable a parent could be tricked into thinking something is educational, but it would be difficult not to notice something blatantly macabre or bizarre like this.
The biggest issue so far is that the story is technically devoid of horror elements, as well as major events. There's little to no progression, centering instead on describing the film itself rather than explaining how the narrator came to view it, the effects it had on them, and the context surrounding it. Additionally, the protagonist transitions into waking up from a dream, which was not specified as occurring earlier. They also go on to state that it could've been a dream, while also saying they're 100% certain it exists: choose between the two, either they know its real, or they're unsure if it was all a fever dream.
Ask yourself: how can I emphasize what makes this supposed content disturbing, which separates it from other typical kid's media or shock media? What would be particularly curious or unique about it? How can you have a real progression of time in the story: do any new developments occur, what characters interact with each other, and how do they resolve (or come to accept) the final impact the film leaves?