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The Eye[]

I was walking in the woods when I saw a giant eye. I ran for my life and made it out alive. I had friends with me, but they weren't lucky... They died from shock. The eye kept coming back, and always killed many. Finally, when it left, the death toll was 21. How did the eye look? Well, it was big, red, and evil looking. If you see it, run as fast as you can, or you'll 100% die...

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Anonymous437 (talk) 03:56, 28 January 2023 (UTC)[]

Yeah, no. This is unfinished, a massive chunk of context is missing. In case you have absolutely no clue, here are some prompts to expand your story and make it decent. 1. Why were you in the forest? How/when/where exactly did the eye appear?

2. What is your relation with your friends?

3. This isn't an issue with context, but why did your friends die from shock? Because seeing a part of any average human body is too scary for you?

4. It "killed many," but only killed 21 people. Yeah, that would certainly be cause for alarm, but unless the population is 100, that isn't too bad.

5. Why didn't anybody try to stop the eye? Why is the eye killing people?

6. What would "evil-looking mean"? Does it have an awesome doomsday mech suit? Are rotting chunks of whatever eyes are made of falling off? Elaborate.

7. Ah yes, you will 100% die. Somehow, there will be no 50-50 odds like there were for you.

Conclusion: This has tons of story missing and needs a lot of time to build up into something decent. If you want to know what exactly is expected, check out this handy-dandy page here:

Do not take anything I said personally, my only reason for this is to help you improve as an author.

William See (talk) 03:01, 7 February 2023 (UTC)[]

As Anonymous summarized, there's a lot more work that needs to go into this. Its basically a prompt, a quick one or two sentence idea that gives you a starting point. I think the concept of giant evil eyeballs is usually pretty compelling, so I would like to see you just write something and see if you can connect point A with point B.