The Never-Ending Lucid Nightmare[]
I wake up with a gasp. I look at the alarm clock on the side of my bed. It reads 2:59 am. I check my phone, no texts or phone calls from my parents or my girlfriend. I shrugged it off since it happens a lot to me. I shrug it off and I go back to sleep.
I find myself at the foot of my bed. I look at my hands and I have 4 fingers. I am now aware of my surroundings, and I am fully controlling this dream.
Cool. I think.
I think of a portal to another universe. Nothing shows up. I think of my old dog. She doesnโt appear.
Donโt you usually control lucid dreams? I think to myself.
I hear whispers coming from the hallway. They sound like my parents. They come closer, closer, and closer. Suddenly my door opens and thereโs a shadow thatโs vaguely the height of my dad.
I switch the light switch. Light fills the room and I take a closer look at what is supposed to be my fatherโs figure. It looks identical to him. And I almost think itโs him before I look closely at his face. I can see fresh blood trickling down his cheek. He has a crazy look in his face as he looks like he wants to eat me alive.
Two figures emerge from the dark hallway. Again, they resemble the ones who Iโm close to. And yet, they arenโt. All of them have blood trickling down their cheeks.
My mind was telling me to run for my life. But my legs donโt move. I try to think of moving. But I am stuck here frozen as the figures come closer and closer until they are inches away from my face.
They get bigger and bigger until they look like they can eat me whole.
I wake up with a gasp. I look at the alarm clock near my bed. It reads 2:59 am. I check my phone, no texts or phone calls from my parents or my girlfriend. I shrug it off and go back to sleep.
I find myself at the foot of my bed. The whispers are getting louder and louder.
This is the 50th time tonight I deal with this. And I cannot find a way to stop this.
Omlettthebeagleโฅ๐ฏ๐ถ๐๐โฅ๐๐๐๐๐๐พ๐ท๐ (talk) 20:35, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
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HopelessNightOwl (talk) 01:15, 4 May 2024 (UTC)[]
This is well composed but bland. Besides the fact that the dream has been repeating for weeks, it's a very average description of a lucid nightmare.
Cornco- *splutters and dies* (talk) 07:09, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[]
I don't think this is a very interesting story. It's more just a fast description of wild events, but there's not enough of a backbone or throughline to make any of it worthwhile. I would advise slowing down the pace and trying to express an actual narrative with these random happenings rather than just having them being the focus of attention. It could also use more proofreading.