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This was a damn delicious and disturbing pasta. Wasn't cliched in my opinion, and had all the right elements to make an effective story. I was worried near the end that it would be ruined by the killer or whoever coming in to off the protagonist. Did you write this? Peace for ourselves requires peace for all peoples 05:21, September 21, 2011 (UTC)

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Excellent read. Remember to mark it as OC if it's your original story. --King Starscream 17:37, September 21, 2011 (UTC)

Actually yes, this is the first real in-depth CP I've made. I'm glad somebody likes it!The One and Only Dildozer 18:47, September 21, 2011 (UTC)

Please remember to add all OC marked pages to the User Submissions page as soon as you add the tag. ClericofMadness 19:35, September 21, 2011 (UTC)

I liked this, it was very realstic... and nothing was really clitche. Very well done. :) LadyMystery 20:27, September 21, 2011 (UTC)

Very good! 9.5/10 Weirdowithcoffee 02:09, November 26, 2011 (UTC)Weirdowithcoffee

I would say that pretty much the entire thing was good... but the ending felt, for lack of a better word, empty. I just feel as if the ending was for a 7/10 ending for a 9.5/10 pasta BoBoThaChimp (talk) 05:58, August 16, 2012 (UTC)

Eh, I guess this pasta wasn't totally to my fancy. It seemed to follow a linear style for a story, what with the video files and all. It seems realistic, but it's honestly boring. And not for its extremity, but more, I'd say, for it's lack of deviation or originality. I don't know. Something just didn't strike a chord with me. Ryonne (talk) 00:32, August 20, 2012 (UTC)

I definitely enjoyed this, definitely my style with the gore and such. As a previous poster said, I was honestly expecting the woman in the video to end up being the protagonist bringing the laptop home, with the sixth video being the killer watching the woman watching the sixth video. But that wasn't it at all. Not scary, just creepy. I like it. Achnatohn (talk) 00:43, August 20, 2012 (UTC)

It was pretty good throughout the whole story until the ending. Seeing all that suspense and mystery rise until it hit a "oh lol just a jealous lady, teehee" makes me feel robbed of my emotions. TonyChangalang (talk) 19:47, August 24, 2012 (UTC)

Meh ,average not too good in my opinion.Overtly cliche, 4/10 lackluster at best

Pretty good, a sight for sore eyes in the "Crappy Pastas" that have been showing up lately. Not an ideal story, but a pretty good one. Definitely a bland ending, though. 87%

Archivistoflostsouls (talk) 18:54, September 18, 2012 (UTC)

Excellent! It leaves me wanting more. something which I honestly love! Keep up the good work! 10/10. CreepyPastaCritic (talk) 22:07, October 9, 2012 (UTC)CreepyPastaCritic

I find it hard to believe that she couldn't find a laptop for less than $600.Kali DemiDarkness (talk) 13:09, February 19, 2013 (UTC)

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