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A well written pasta Kill and a very original idea. Good use of adjectives and spelling was spot on. The end was a little abrupt and a slight lack of detail even for a short story I thought, but I did like it. 8/10 - [[User:CrashingCymbal|CrashingCymbal]] ([[User talk:CrashingCymbal|talk]]) 13:27, May 13, 2013 (UTC) |
A well written pasta Kill and a very original idea. Good use of adjectives and spelling was spot on. The end was a little abrupt and a slight lack of detail even for a short story I thought, but I did like it. 8/10 - [[User:CrashingCymbal|CrashingCymbal]] ([[User talk:CrashingCymbal|talk]]) 13:27, May 13, 2013 (UTC) |
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| + | I really enjoyed this pasta. Good prose, goodpacing, etc. The story itself was exellent as a stand alone, but this story could be expanded upon, which made it more compelling. It could be continued or retold from the perspective of the other family members, even extended upon after the father makes his scrifice. Very good pice of work Kill, Bravo![[User:Septogram7|Septogram7]] ([[User talk:Septogram7|talk]]) 17:18, May 13, 2013 (UTC) |
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Congrats Kill
A well written pasta Kill and a very original idea. Good use of adjectives and spelling was spot on. The end was a little abrupt and a slight lack of detail even for a short story I thought, but I did like it. 8/10 - CrashingCymbal (talk) 13:27, May 13, 2013 (UTC)
I really enjoyed this pasta. Good prose, goodpacing, etc. The story itself was exellent as a stand alone, but this story could be expanded upon, which made it more compelling. It could be continued or retold from the perspective of the other family members, even extended upon after the father makes his scrifice. Very good pice of work Kill, Bravo!Septogram7 (talk) 17:18, May 13, 2013 (UTC)