Intersting pasta, but needs work 8/10 I crash in the night, an innocent life taken away... what the hell am I talking about (talk) 23:41, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
I really like this one, but there's a major problem, and that's the grammar. There are many points (especially the part where they're trying to escape from the jail) where I had to use my imagination to even understand what's going on. Other than that, it was actually pretty good. 8/10
P.S. I didn't like the "This is creepy pasta after all....." part, it kind of breaks the fourth wall in a very awkward way.
That was actually creepy as tits. B++ I don't always make sense, but when I do, I don't. (talk) 22:10, February 26, 2013 (UTC)