I like it, for a first Creepy Pasta it is good and for a rushed one it is very good! I enjoyed reading it and like the style of writing! The Classy Creep (talk) 08:57, April 4, 2013 (UTC)
Starting this to ask you all for your opinion on my pasta. You can be honest, I will appreciate it, but please don't be uneccisarily blunt or rude. I don't mind constructive criticism even if it can be a bit harsh, but don't mindlessly bash please.
Also please take into consideration that its my first pasta and I haven't spent all that much time on it. With that out of the way, whaddaya think?