A good, well written story. The suspense built up really put me on edge, but I think the ending was a little lazily written. After all that amazing build up it ends with- "I believe it took Jonathan to another dimension, I got him killed! Now I have to live with that." That would be fine if you gave some clue about another dimension when down the stairs, otherwise what would give him that thought? And also, if John is in another dimension, he can't be sure that he is dead. As I said, amazing story, lousy ending. No offense or anything.

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