Talk: The Mannequins That Danced

I The "drawing" that went with the journal kind of drew me in, but not in a good way. The entries are from 1499, so what is the writer doing drawing with MSPaint? So I read through the story to see if it got any better. It's interesting, but too vague, I think. And the writing style of the author doesn't really match the time frame that he/she is supposed to be in. The writer did seem to make a valiant effort to fluff up the descriptions of things by throwing in a jumble of adjectives. But overall, I think this pasta might have potiential. Just study up on the writing mannerisms of people from the early 1500's if you want to mimic their style. Good luck! --DollParts 09:31, July 9, 2012 (UTC)