I have to admit, this is not bad for a Pokemon pasta. If you love something, let it go. If it comes back, it's yours forever. 01:32, February 20, 2012 (UTC)
Just a tidbit, Raticate (and also Ratata) can learn Dig by TM, ever since Gen 1. That one line, "That was strange, I didn’t think Raticate could learn Dig." stood out to me. Didn't detract from the horror. Also, was Joey snorting Iron or something? What gives? --The Cleansing's Keeper 04:59, April 16, 2012 (UTC)
As far as Pokemon pastas go, this was pretty good. Shinigami.Eyes 19:30, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
For the person 2 comments above. REALLY!
For the Creepypasta writer. Good Job
Go away Ghost. Everyone is dead now. 22:47, October 22, 2012 (UTC)
Not bad honestly, only compliant, electric shock isn't a move.