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  • The Last Bomb
    by Sykokillah

    This is the shortest pasta I've written (Under 10 lines) and it only has two comments which have been positive. It's really hard to say something about this without spoiling anything. It basically involves the final bomb in a nuclear war blowing up and how the survivors react.



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    • I enjoyed the premise, but thought the execution could have used a bit of work. I've noticed a lot of micro stories are hit-or-miss (with me at least). They either are small stories containing a satisfying punch, or they seem to create more questions than they answer and feel like they should be fleshed out into complete stories. The Last Bomb is the latter for me.

      I would have liked to see a little more fleshing out of the tribe. Who are they? (It doesn't seem like they're human based on some of the lines) How are they immune to radiation? (My mind went to cockroaches based on the theory that the only animal to survive a nuclear holocaust would be cockroaches.) Etc. The story has a good foundation, but after reading, I found myself wanting a bit more.

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    • EmpyrealInvective wrote:
      I enjoyed the premise, but thought the execution could have used a bit of work. I've noticed a lot of micro stories are hit-or-miss (with me at least). They either are small stories containing a satisfying punch, or they seem to create more questions than they answer and feel like they should be fleshed out into complete stories. The Last Bomb is the latter for me.

      I would have liked to see a little more fleshing out of the tribe. Who are they? (It doesn't seem like they're human based on some of the lines) How are they immune to radiation? (My mind went to cockroaches based on the theory that the only animal to survive a nuclear holocaust would be cockroaches.) Etc. The story has a good foundation, but after reading, I found myself wanting a bit more.

      Thanks for the feedback. When writing, I did picture the tribe as intelligent cockroaches or something along that line.

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    • Sykokillah wrote:

      EmpyrealInvective wrote:
      I enjoyed the premise, but thought the execution could have used a bit of work. I've noticed a lot of micro stories are hit-or-miss (with me at least). They either are small stories containing a satisfying punch, or they seem to create more questions than they answer and feel like they should be fleshed out into complete stories. The Last Bomb is the latter for me.

      I would have liked to see a little more fleshing out of the tribe. Who are they? (It doesn't seem like they're human based on some of the lines) How are they immune to radiation? (My mind went to cockroaches based on the theory that the only animal to survive a nuclear holocaust would be cockroaches.) Etc. The story has a good foundation, but after reading, I found myself wanting a bit more.

      Thanks for the feedback. When writing, I did picture the tribe as intelligent cockroaches or something along that line.

      Woo, I was right! I think the word tribe was what threw me in the first place.

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