• I have a story inspired by the semi-recent discovery of a Nazi weather outpost called Schatzgraber where I decided to take what we know about the post, put a horror twist on it, which I think has a solid story but I'm at a loss as to the way to actually write it.

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    • As someone who is unfamiliar with Schatzgraber, i would suggest beginning the story with what is so interesting about it. News of the discovery clearly grabbed your attention in some way, so use that critical first sentence (and first paragraph) to convince someone like me why I should want to delve deeper into the subject as you have.

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    • I agree you should open by explaining the real-world basis.  I've always felt creepypasta work best when they're told by someone in-universe trying to inform us about the events.

      That said, I think you can brainstorm by asking some questions.  My first question is: who's the POV character?  Is he researching it from a distance, or actually going there?  If he is going there, why?

      Now, if he's researching it from a distance, how did he gain access to information we don't have?  If he's up close, who funded him going there and why?  Is he supposed to be sharing this information?

      Also, given that this station is in the Arctic, I suspect any story you set there will draw comparisons to At the Moutains of Madness by HP Lovecraft (has anyone else noticed that Lovecraft was the proto-creepypasta writer...only more racist...).  That's not a bad thing, just something to bear in mind.  I'd suggest reading AtMoM and either setting up some sense of homage, or trying to do your own thing.

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    • Serpenthrope: It is made to be a journal of a low-level Wermacht soldier named Gerhard Bauman who is assigned to a security role at the remote "weather station." I've made some headway: basically he starts out explaining a bit about his stance in the war, his concerns for his family how he hates the Allies for wiping out 2/3s of his home city of Wilhelmshaven, etc. Being a fresh recruit, he's not a scientist in the least. He's being sent there with some other soldiers and important scientists, and he only gets close to a younger machine gunner and an older vet.

      Until the events start to unfold he has no idea what Schatzgraber's purpose really is, he only takes note that the scientists have little to do with meteorology and that the garrison's armament is extensive, as well as the facilities of the base.

      At the Mountains is perhaps my favorite story of Lovecraft's, my favorite deranged, xenophobe horror writer since he was one of the first to think outside the box. Strangely, I actually never noticed the parellels but you're right: they're there! I'm not sure whether to capitalize on those similarities in plot line or make it more my own thing: the problem I'm having is maintaining the journal format.

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    • RCain: Well originally I was going to make it a sort of David Paulides style of analytical storytelling as part of my Horrors of the Battlefield series: where a writer/journalist (me) takes an objective stance at retelling the stories of situations soldiers have found themselves in and recounted to him somehow, offering little input himself. What interested me was not only did no one ever find this base until really recently, despite the fairly clear documentation about it, but the reason it was abandoned. Given that I'm taking the official story and twisting it, I see no way to lead with that without obviously spoiling the story too quickly. I may still use this format once the overall arc has made its way onto paper and been fleshed out, sorta like how my "author" does it where he takes a full testimony and summarizes it.

      As it currently stands, the main character leads with his attitude of wanting instead to fight on the front and his last goodbye to his brother who is an officer in the Kreigsmarine before he ships out. There's definitely room to improve, I think maybe I just need to get it all out and then I can start to carve the shape as it were.

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    • @MrEvans: Sounds good, although from what you're telling me I think we need to back up another step.  If it's the journal of a German soldier, then presumably it's just coming to light now, in 2019 (probably 2020 by the time the story is ready to publish).  If you really want to draw your readers in that necessitates at least some sort of frame narrative.

      Now, this frame narrative doesn't have to be super complex (although it can be).  You could put a single paragraph at the beginning, summing up where the journal came from.  Or, you could write an entire secondary narrative about it's journey onto the internet.  Whichever would help build the dread most effectively for your story.

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    • In the Horrors of the Battlefield format, the "author" explains that the journal found its way to him via the descendant of a US Navy officer who oversaw the capture of the crew of a German submarine, the crew of which included Gerhard while attempting to flee the destruction of the base. Thus his journal was confiscated and then forgotten for some time. Part of that format also includes a personal letter from said officer regarding the sub's capture and what he thinks of the whole affair.

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    • That's pretty good, but I'd at least throw in a line about someone searching through and digitizing old archived books from WWII.  Also, did the writer survive among the crew?  If so, you should definitely mention what happened to him (assuming it was recorded).  If not, I'd suggest mentioning why someone thought his journal was worth grabbing?

      BTW, I worry that it may be bad form to beg for feedback, but we're evidently on at the same time, so would you mind giving a bit on the story I posted?

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    • That could fit, but the journal was actually kept in the family's possessions as the officer managed to bring it home with him after his service and he just forgot about it until his grandson came across it and drew a connection between it and the recent rediscovery of Schatzgraber's ruins.

      I'm actually not sure yet what "happened" to Gerhard after his ordeal, assumedly he was detained further by the US Navy but I don't know if anything comes of what he divulges about the Schatzgraber project. My guess is he was released after the war and tried to return home to the fatherland, and was maybe assasinated by some form of the Nazi party remnants to keep him quiet.

      Bad form? That's what a workshop's for! I'll look.

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    • Thanks!

      And, honestly, we're still just barely living in a time when WWII veterans are alive.  You could have the grandson interview him, either in the initial story or save it for a possible sequel.

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