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  • When I Was At The Store I Saw A new copy of Monsters Inc but the cover didn't have Mike on It and Sully Was Crying In the background. When I went to buy it the cashier said that it was free. When I got home I put it in my xbox and It started playing like normal but when it got to the part where Mike was in Randall's lair in the chair. Blood Started Spewing out of the machine when randal left Mike was still in the chair when his lips touched the machine Mike exploded with blood. After that I took the disk out of the xbox and threw it out of the window and It got ran over. The next week a saw and randal plush with knife then I got stabbed in the brain

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    • EmpyrealInvective
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      15:50, March 14, 2020
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    • A few things: Your story is a lost episode/lost media story which requires a spinoff appeal before it can be posted. That being said, it currently doesn't meet our bare minimum quality standards due to capitalization (you improperly capitalize words in the middle of sentences and fail to capitalize proper nouns), punctuation (you forget to properly use commas in sentences and periods), awkward wording, and plot issues (the story is very rushed, lacks effective description/story-telling, and relies heavily on tropes).

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    • Oof ok um so there’s a lot to tackle here.

      1. Lost episode/Haunted Media is a blacklisted subject 2. “and then I died” is a surefire way to bring the reader out of his or her or their immersion. 3. Excessive blood. Gore does not equal scary. I really wish people would stop doing this. 4. An assortment of different grammatical errors; Unnecessary Capitalization, run on sentences that are really long and just keep going and oh God when do they stop oh man oh my, improper punctuation mispeling, lack of capitalization in certain areas. Just overall incorrect grammar. 5. Tropes that were cool at first, but they’re now tired and overdone. These include: Bought for free, a random character crying, it’s normal (but then not), gore, MC dies in the end. 6. This story also lacks ambiguity. It’s not really left up to us what may or may not have happened. We know what happened. The main character died to a Randall plush with a knife. I’m not saying ambiguity is required in every story, it just helps convey horror.

      Overall, this story doesn’t meet the quality standards here on the wiki. I can give you some tips for writing creepypasta if you would like! ^^

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    • Don't make a .EXE story. Sonic.exe should be the only one and THATS IT. Please stop trying to spoof it.

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    • EmpyrealInvective wrote:
      A few things: Your story is a lost episode/lost media story which requires a spinoff appeal before it can be posted. That being said, it currently doesn't meet our bare minimum quality standards due to capitalization (you improperly capitalize words in the middle of sentences and fail to capitalize proper nouns), punctuation (you forget to properly use commas in sentences and periods), awkward wording, and plot issues (the story is very rushed, lacks effective description/story-telling, and relies heavily on tropes).

      This guy had to have an admin tell him this. and good on him. Admins know alot and i forgot about the spinoff appeal. : )

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