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  • Long ago back when Europe raged war upon itself, back when a man murdered his cousin for his country, back when where there was quite there was also nothing but the passing of death. The year is 1944 with the world in the chaos of world war 2 and one man is trying to win this bloodshed with nothing but the brute force of soldiers. This man's name is Adolf Hitler and he the leader behind this bloodshed and now after his defeat at the Battle of Stalingrad and the push of both British and Soviet forces. He knows he'll lose this pointless war so instead of ending it all stoping it right there he chooses to continue the death and despair but with a different approach this time. An approach out of something you only hear from a story you shouldn't read. I should know my sweet boy you see I was one of the men who witnessed it. Now here is a story that should teach you to leave things be and if it somewhere that makes it hard to find then it shouldn't be messed with. I was only a young man back then but it was still foolish to think this man was correct with his and this strange idea of his but we can't change the past now, can we? But anyway I did as I was told and I was told to do two simple things. first, take the bodies to the lake of blood second don't ask questions.

    Of course like a good soldier I did as I was told and brought many bodies to the lake, I even recognized a few as those who fell in battle but they were mainly officer telling from their clean and new uniforms and the fact that our living one yelled at us if we mistreated the corpses. After a while, we finally took all of them in where we were relieved by a different battalion. We were then told by a commanding officer to wait outside and stand guard with the others. After about an hour of standing outside of this strange cave covered in markings none of us were intelligible to understand we started hearing laughter then the words of a man say in an ecstatic   and warm but surprised tone,“ I'm alive” repeating the phase louder the 2end time. Although we were eaten alive by curiosity we decided to stay at our post to avoid being yelled at by our officer. but soon it sounded like a parade in there

    After a few minutes, those cheers suddenly went silent followed by the roar of something of pure anger and evil followed by the screams and gunshots of our comrades.so as instinct we rushed to their aid only to be confronted by fleeing soldiers screaming and crying like babies to see through at the back of these chidlish men those to slow were dragged into a dark abyss followed by the men…the same men we brought in to run at us covered in black veins and marking across their face. At first, we froze bewildered at this and so did they as if something was keeping them from tearing through us as they did the other's. But just like that one of resurrected in the front made a horrible snarl screeching at us like some war cry making the other's charge at us. so like the smart men we were we ran and we and ran like the babies before us until we got out of that cave to see the same men crying and screaming just before in front of the cave ready to fire with sadness and rage in their eyes. A  nd as soon as we passed them they fired and mowed them down one by one ripping bullet through their cursed bodies that is until…they ran out of bullets. Then that's when the things tore them apart and they went down as fighters. But me? I ran like a coward and that's what kept me alive and it will be what keeps you alive my dear boy. And that is what those things outside. They are why you can't go outside and why satan and his soldiers have the world as their domain and why sooner or later you will have to run and allow me to go down like a fighter.But do remember boy that if you stay as a fighter with me then you will die like me to.

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    • Before I can even begin to review the actual content of the pasta, there are countless spelling and grammar mistakes that you need to fix. A lot of punctuation is also missing and many of the sentences run-on much longer than they should. There are also a lot of words missing from certain sentences. I would highly advise against typing your pastas directly into the Wiki (if this is what you have been doing). Instead, you should use the Spellcheck function on word to try and minimise these types of mistakes.

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    • im sorry about that again i put to much trust into grammerly but can you point them out and i think i know some of the run on sentacnes your talking about but thanks for your help and again sorry about typing derictly on the wiki

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    • Cornconic wrote:
      Before I can even begin to review the actual content of the pasta, there are countless spelling and grammar mistakes that you need to fix. A lot of punctuation is also missing and many of the sentences run-on much longer than they should. There are also a lot of words missing from certain sentences. I would highly advise against typing your pastas directly into the Wiki (if this is what you have been doing). Instead, you should use the Spellcheck function on word to try and minimise these types of mistakes.

      i fixed quite a bit of it i can't see anymore mistakes in grammer or spelling but if you do then tell and thanks for your feedback

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    • Madgermandoger wrote: i fixed quite a bit of it i can't see anymore mistakes in grammer or spelling but if you do then tell and thanks for your feedback

      There's still many errors to be fixed, too many for me to tell you individually. Have you copy-pasted the pasta into Microsoft Word? There is a spellcheck function built-in on Word that can help you with your grammar, rather than having to fix it manually.

      Also, how old are you, if you don't mind me asking? The minimum age to post a pasta is 13. If you're any younger than this, you aren't allowed to add a page onto the site.

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    • 13 but my laptop dosen't have microsoft word the best i got is google docs and grammerly but didn't pay for prueimum bundle so im sorry about these mistakes and i really don't know what i can use to fix them 

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    • Cornconic wrote:

      Madgermandoger wrote: i fixed quite a bit of it i can't see anymore mistakes in grammer or spelling but if you do then tell and thanks for your feedback

      There's still many errors to be fixed, too many for me to tell you individually. Have you copy-pasted the pasta into Microsoft Word? There is a spellcheck function built-in on Word that can help you with your grammar, rather than having to fix it manually.

      Also, how old are you, if you don't mind me asking? The minimum age to post a pasta is 13. If you're any younger than this, you aren't allowed to add a page onto the site.

      alright there isn anything i could that could help me and i cant see anymore errors and the primitavie soruces I have don see any either so not much i can do 

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    • Madgermandoger wrote:

      Cornconic wrote:

      Madgermandoger wrote: i fixed quite a bit of it i can't see anymore mistakes in grammer or spelling but if you do then tell and thanks for your feedback

      There's still many errors to be fixed, too many for me to tell you individually. Have you copy-pasted the pasta into Microsoft Word? There is a spellcheck function built-in on Word that can help you with your grammar, rather than having to fix it manually.

      Also, how old are you, if you don't mind me asking? The minimum age to post a pasta is 13. If you're any younger than this, you aren't allowed to add a page onto the site.

      alright there isn anything i could that could help me and i cant see anymore errors and the primitavie soruces I have don see any either so not much i can do 

      Like I said, there are still plenty of errors. I would recommend downloading Word ASAP, or using an online spellchecker if you can't see any errors yourself. In its current format, this pasta is not acceptable.

      You sure you're 13? It's not a good habit to lie about your age on the internet. Could get you in a lot of trouble...

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    • positive there no need for me to lie my birth year was in early 2006 

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    • okey finally after looking for a while a found a site that tells me if a sentence is to long or if that the wrong type of word so now I hope you can enjoy this 

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    • If you honestly can't tell that there are still spelling/grammar mistakes left over in the text, my only advice is to wait a few years before contributing to this site again. Maybe I have too much faith in our current education system, but I refuse to believe that a 13-year-old would make such frequent errors, and not even be able to see where they have gone wrong. Even your replies are almost indecipherable, you seem incapable of using any form of punctuation. These are 8-year-old mistakes to be making.

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    • Cornconic wrote:
      If you honestly can't tell that there are still spelling/grammar mistakes left over in the text, my only advice is to wait a few years before contributing to this site again. Maybe I have too much faith in our current education system, but I refuse to believe that a 13-year-old would make such frequent errors, and not even be able to see where they have gone wrong. Even your replies are almost indecipherable, you seem incapable of using any form of punctuation. These are 8-year-old mistakes to be making.

      i honestly don't see them and i don't see the mistakes your talking about so honestly there isn't much i can do anymore because i've gone to over 6 diffreint sites for this but i do apperictae your reponse 

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