Usually, when I get home from work, I sit down and online chat with my friends. It calms me down, and they are level-headed people. This time the computer loaded a new version of the online chatting lobby. I supposed it was just an update. What I didn't like is that my online friends - weren't there.
A new group of people was on the keyboard, in which they were calm and quiet people. They never really responded to my messages, I just tuned in and watched their other conversation.
FrostMan99: Going out is fun. Do you guys ever go out to dinner?
captured2: I don't usually. Only when I lose motivation to cook.
Najam: That's pretty normal. Do you guys ever go fast food?
The conversation was pretty long, and it was getting late. However, the 'Najam' guy was comparing everything to normal, just seemed weird.
Since this is only a small snippet, there really isn't anything to go on, and therefore it is hard to give an actual opinion. I suggest you upload a complete draft of a story next time so we can give accurate feedback. Additionally, it is unlikely anyone is going to want to keep coming back and checking the page to see if you added more.
I like it, you could send it into many directions I am intreged the concept of change is scary but this is presenting something that I find interesting the focus on not the change in the story but the "Normal"
I think it's too little for me to know what is going to happen to say anything about it? Essentially like giving me a nosleep title and asking me what I think about the story. Well, yeah, you could go to an infinite number of horrifiying conclusions, but like, that's a pretty basic horror topic you've chosen. A creepy dude. If I knew what's next; I could tell you if I liked it or not.
There's nothing here. I'm assuming that one guy is supposed to be a nonhuman creature, but theres nothing here to really make that work. You should also give each response that someone says it's own line. Theres also typos riddled throughout this. I don't really see how this could be fixed, because there is nothing here.