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  • Once upon a time, a man named George along with his wife and daughter were in a village called "Palaiomonastiro", they were in that village for the summertime.

    George also had 2 other brothers but 8 years before they were ruined over by a black Kenworth truck, even though George only heard about what happened to his brothers, at that specific time he could feel his brothers' bones getting crushed by the gigantic wheels of the truck.

    Their skull getting destroyed as it ran them over. That was disturbing but at the same time, the sound of the cracking bones had something that made George feeling eerily happy.

    After that happened, George had a phobia about vehicles, especially like big ones (trucks, vans, sport utility vehicles, crossover utility vehicles, and steamrollers).

    These specific types of vehicles had something very creepy about them, their big grilles along with their headlights were like the eyes and mouths of demons looking at the faces of people that were walking.

    George and his family eventually stayed in a small hotel, despite being small it was pretty clean and neat and that was probably what mattered for that family. The family was pretty tired because they were on the road for like 5 hours in order to arrive at the village, however it was worth it.

    George was sleeping right next to his wife, time was passing very slowly, at least for this good couple. George was calmly sleeping until he started having a strange feeling like someone was watching him.

    He suddenly opened his eyes and he saw that he was in a school, children were happily running around and playing with each other, he then saw 2 boys that looked very much like his brothers, they were happily walking towards the gate of the school.

    George quickly understand what was going to happen and he tried to run towards his brothers and warn them about what was going to happen, however, they weren't hearing him, he was like invisible to them.

    George's screams were useless, they weren't hearing him and they walked more closely to the gate, suddenly the Kenworth truck came and run them over.

    And they were again dead, their guts were all over the road and the kids inside the school were screaming, their screams started echoing through George's ears, and he woke up in his bed again, as nothing had happened but the screams were still echoing in his ears.

    He tried to sleep again but the screams continued to echo, from the screams of kids they became like the sound of a drill that was not stopping, George was pretty scared and it was like he was going crazy, so he took a cross and put it in top of his chest and started praying so that sound could stop echoing in his ears, it was like demons were playing with him, however, after some time the sound stopped and George managed to sleep calmly.  

    The next day George woke up alone in his bed, his wife was nowhere to be found, he decided to get up and go to the kitchen and there was his wife along with his daughter, George tried to ask her what had happened but she didn't answer, she was very scared.

    She only looked at the TV, she increased the volume and the reporter was saying:

    "In a village called Palaiomonastiro. Most trucks, vans, sport utility vehicles, crossover utility vehicles, and coupe utilities have come to life and are attacking the villagers, we advise getting out of the village immediately before you will get killed, we don't know what caused this but we advise you to leave the village before any harm can be done to you or your family". 

    George looked at his wife and daughter for a moment without saying a word and then he told them to follow him and that they were going to escape safely.

    They did that and followed George, they get out of the hotel and started running towards their station wagon, they get in and George started driving, almost everything was calm for some minutes but then a Chevrolet Advance Design panel truck started chasing them.

    His wife and daughter were screaming in horror, the old panel truck was running with demonic speed behind them, no one was driving it.

    However, the wagon was faster than the panel truck so they managed to get away from it for a while but as they thought they had escaped a Volkswagen van collided with them and sent them colliding with the fence of a villa.

    The van started driving towards them, intending to kill them but a man came out of the villa with a rocket launcher and exploded the van, saving the poor family.

    The family get out of their car and followed him inside the villa. After some talking, the man explained to them that the reason these trucks had come to life was that million years ago when the fallen angels fell out of heaven, one of them landed in that village and that now he wanted to kill all the villagers.

    George was family couldn't believe what they heard but still, that was the most possible explanation at this point.

    George then said:

    "My second-cousin has a small team that is against the New World Order and they had plenty of weapons but they are at another village so I don't know if we will be able to find them and they also have a 1953 Ford F-Series panel truck and that could kill them".

    Meanwhile, trucks were chasing villagers almost all around the village, most old people that were retired and had bout luxury crossovers, were now killed by them, while farmers were running away from their tractors and combine harvesters.

    The man in the villa asked George:

    "What is your cousin like?"

    George answered:

    "Well, he is the co-leader and he calls himself the "Antynudity" because he hates people that are naked, even though he has a wife and children, and you probably know how children are born". Also if we run in the mountains won't we have a chance of surviving?".

    The man answered:

    "Well, that is a pretty good idea, I'm going to call my wife and kids and we are going to escape together after some planning, of course, I guess". 

    After the two families had planned their escape they decided to get in the man's station wagon and escape, on the road however a black Kenworth truck started chasing them, it reminded George of the truck that had killed his brothers, from it's big appearance it was like the leader of the other trucks. 

    George was in the third row of the seats so he could almost perfectly see the gigantic truck driving behind them, the sound of it's engine was like a very loud roaring sound. 

    Eventually, they escaped from it and managed to hide in the mountains.

    The mountains were pretty tall and big so he could perfectly see the chaos in the village, the combine harvesters killing most of the farmers eerily reminded him of the harvesting scene in the Bible.

    He then started praying for them to escape and that made the mood a bit calmer, however, the smell of fire from the burning village was still smelling. 

    To Be Continued........

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    • I suggest you first finish the story, then post it on here for review and then you could post it on the site after it's polished. Of course if each part of the bigger story (if you try to make it into a series) can work as a standalone story, you could keep it at that, but remove the "to be continued anyway" if that's the case. 

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    • I removed the "to be continiued sentence" can it be published now:

      Once upon a time, a man named George along with his wife and daughter were in a village called "Palaiomonastiro", they were in that village for the summertime.

      George also had 2 other brothers but 8 years before they were ruined over by a black Kenworth truck, even though George only heard about what happened to his brothers, at that specific time he could feel his brothers' bones getting crushed by the gigantic wheels of the truck.

      Their skull getting destroyed as it ran them over. That was disturbing but at the same time, the sound of the cracking bones had something that made George feeling eerily happy.

      After that happened, George had a phobia about vehicles, especially like big ones (trucks, vans, sport utility vehicles, crossover utility vehicles, and steamrollers).

      These specific types of vehicles had something very creepy about them, their big grilles along with their headlights were like the eyes and mouths of demons looking at the faces of people that were walking.

      George and his family eventually stayed in a small hotel, despite being small it was pretty clean and neat and that was probably what mattered for that family. The family was pretty tired because they were on the road for like 5 hours in order to arrive at the village, however it was worth it.

      George was sleeping right next to his wife, time was passing very slowly, at least for this good couple. George was calmly sleeping until he started having a strange feeling like someone was watching him.

      He suddenly opened his eyes and he saw that he was in a school, children were happily running around and playing with each other, he then saw 2 boys that looked very much like his brothers, they were happily walking towards the gate of the school.

      George quickly understand what was going to happen and he tried to run towards his brothers and warn them about what was going to happen, however, they weren't hearing him, he was like invisible to them.

      George's screams were useless, they weren't hearing him and they walked more closely to the gate, suddenly the Kenworth truck came and run them over.

      And they were again dead, their guts were all over the road and the kids inside the school were screaming, their screams started echoing through George's ears, and he woke up in his bed again, as nothing had happened but the screams were still echoing in his ears.

      He tried to sleep again but the screams continued to echo, from the screams of kids they became like the sound of a drill that was not stopping, George was pretty scared and it was like he was going crazy, so he took a cross and put it in top of his chest and started praying so that sound could stop echoing in his ears, it was like demons were playing with him, however, after some time the sound stopped and George managed to sleep calmly.  

      The next day George woke up alone in his bed, his wife was nowhere to be found, he decided to get up and go to the kitchen and there was his wife along with his daughter, George tried to ask her what had happened but she didn't answer, she was very scared.

      She only looked at the TV, she increased the volume and the reporter was saying:

      "In a village called Palaiomonastiro. Most trucks, vans, sport utility vehicles, crossover utility vehicles, and coupe utilities have come to life and are attacking the villagers, we advise getting out of the village immediately before you will get killed, we don't know what caused this but we advise you to leave the village before any harm can be done to you or your family". 

      George looked at his wife and daughter for a moment without saying a word and then he told them to follow him and that they were going to escape safely.

      They did that and followed George, they get out of the hotel and started running towards their station wagon, they get in and George started driving, almost everything was calm for some minutes but then a Chevrolet Advance Design panel truck started chasing them.

      His wife and daughter were screaming in horror, the old panel truck was running with demonic speed behind them, no one was driving it.

      However, the wagon was faster than the panel truck so they managed to get away from it for a while but as they thought they had escaped a Volkswagen van collided with them and sent them colliding with the fence of a villa.

      The van started driving towards them, intending to kill them but a man came out of the villa with a rocket launcher and exploded the van, saving the poor family.

      The family get out of their car and followed him inside the villa. After some talking, the man explained to them that the reason these trucks had come to life was that million years ago when the fallen angels fell out of heaven, one of them landed in that village and that now he wanted to kill all the villagers.

      George was family couldn't believe what they heard but still, that was the most possible explanation at this point.

      George then said:

      "My second-cousin has a small team that is against the New World Order and they had plenty of weapons but they are at another village so I don't know if we will be able to find them and they also have a 1953 Ford F-Series panel truck and that could kill them".

      Meanwhile, trucks were chasing villagers almost all around the village, most old people that were retired and had bout luxury crossovers, were now killed by them, while farmers were running away from their tractors and combine harvesters.

      The man in the villa asked George:

      "What is your cousin like?"

      George answered:

      "Well, he is the co-leader and he calls himself the "Antynudity" because he hates people that are naked, even though he has a wife and children, and you probably know how children are born". Also if we run in the mountains won't we have a chance of surviving?".

      The man answered:

      "Well, that is a pretty good idea, I'm going to call my wife and kids and we are going to escape together after some planning, of course, I guess". 

      After the two families had planned their escape they decided to get in the man's station wagon and escape, on the road however a black Kenworth truck started chasing them, it reminded George of the truck that had killed his brothers, from it's big appearance it was like the leader of the other trucks. 

      George was in the third row of the seats so he could almost perfectly see the gigantic truck driving behind them, the sound of it's engine was like a very loud roaring sound. 

      Eventually, they escaped from it and managed to hide in the mountains.

      The mountains were pretty tall and big so he could perfectly see the chaos in the village, the combine harvesters killing most of the farmers eerily reminded him of the harvesting scene in the Bible.

      He then started praying for them to escape and that made the mood a bit calmer, however, the smell of fire from the burning village was still smelling. 

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    • Edit the post itself, don't publish the revised version in the comments.

      And no, it definitely can't be posted as it is. Just because you removed the 'To be continued' part doesn't mean the story's complete.

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    • No, you can't publish this.  It is really, really not a good story.  It doesn't make any internal sense---everything seems completely random and, honestly, really goofy.  Not every idea you have has to go into this one story.  Pick a single idea and go from there. 

      It's also riddled with grammar and punctuation problems.  You need to do some studying and reading before you can even think about writing a story.

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