I think the pacing is a big dificulty. It's kinda all over the place. You have some lines that are pretty long next to some that are very short. I'd say your first order of business for a touch up would be normalizing the pace. Rearrange, add, remove, and otherwise modify the words and sentence structure to give it rhythm and make it flow in a way that doesn't start and stop.
Once that's fixed, maybe consider lengthening it a bit. Add in details like the sense of confusion and frustration at his boss giving him the silent treatment. Let us feel his stomach drop when he finds the police at his home. Express his dread at the big reveal. I know poetry really limits your ability to convey those things, but finding ways to do so while keeping the rhythm smooth for the reader will help you get better both at the syntax of poetry and the nuances of story writing.