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ClericofMadness (talk) 20:26, December 8, 2017 (UTC)

Re: M4R

Hey, just wanted to let you know that I marked two of your stories for review as they might not be up to QS. For future stories, you may want to post them in the Writer's Workshop. 

Custom signature? pfft, as if I were that creative (talk) 22:05, February 22, 2018 (UTC)

QS Question Response

The QS stands for Quality Standards. All stories on the site have to meet them to stay. You can find them in the link below.


As for the Review, it means that an admin will read the story to see if it can stay on the wiki or not. Sorry for marking your stories. The major issue with them is the plot. To be honest the plot's are rushed and overused. Without anything fresh it's just another pasta out of the thousands. If you like, when you make a new pasta you can send it my way and I can help you out? I'd love to help you if you want!

Custom signature? pfft, as if I were that creative (talk) 22:33, February 22, 2018 (UTC)

Story deletion

Your story has been deleted because it doesn't meet the wiki's quality standards. If you feel that it did meet the standards, please state your case on Deletion Appeal. Make sure you follow the instructions to the letter there, or your appeal will be automatically denied.

DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules.

Read the Deletion FAQ and our Style Guide for Writing for details on the 'what' and 'why' of the deletions we make.

Read this guide and these blog posts for further details on how you can improve your story/stories to make them meet our quality standards.

For additional help, submit your story to the Writer's Workshop for feedback.

Helel ben Shahaar (talk) 22:08, February 23, 2018 (UTC)

Story deletion

Your story has been deleted because it doesn't meet the wiki's quality standards. If you feel that it did meet the standards, please state your case on Deletion Appeal. Make sure you follow the instructions to the letter there, or your appeal will be automatically denied.

DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules.

Read the Deletion FAQ and our Style Guide for Writing for details on the 'what' and 'why' of the deletions we make.

Read this guide and these blog posts for further details on how you can improve your story/stories to make them meet our quality standards.

For additional help, submit your story to the Writer's Workshop for feedback.

MrDupin (talk) 14:36, March 3, 2018 (UTC)

Story deletion

Your story has been deleted because it doesn't meet the wiki's quality standards. If you feel that it did meet the standards, please state your case on Deletion Appeal. Make sure you follow the instructions to the letter there, or your appeal will be automatically denied.

DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules.

Read the Deletion FAQ and our Style Guide for Writing for details on the 'what' and 'why' of the deletions we make.

Read this guide and these blog posts for further details on how you can improve your story/stories to make them meet our quality standards.

For additional help, submit your story to the Writer's Workshop for feedback.

MrDupin (talk) 01:58, April 9, 2018 (UTC)

New Life Re-Write Permission

Hello, you asked if you were allowed to re-write New Life. I would be glad to let you do so and the credit is appreciated.

--Iron Mosquito (talk) 04:28, March 6, 2019 (UTC)Iron Mosquito

Narration Request: The Wallet


I'm one of the narrators on the site, and I enjoyed this story a lot. I would love to bring it to life. If so, please let me know as soon as you can, so that I can start on it this next week.

--No Time Creepy (talk) 05:51, April 1, 2019 (UTC)NoTime

Page Deletion Request Response

The pages you've requested have been deleted. Please let us know if we can do anything else. Have a good one.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 20:26, April 27, 2019 (UTC)

PoTM Question Response

As far as I know, there are no rules against that. Just be sure not to nominate one of your own.

Helel ben Shahaar (talk) 19:20, May 20, 2019 (UTC)

Errant Response

Hey, I just saw your message on here. Sorry about that. What's going on?

--No Time Creepy (talk) 19:57, May 24, 2019 (UTC)NoTime

Re: Category

I'll give it a look at later tonight when I get some free time and add your category if you meet the requirements. I'll drop you a line when I finish. Have a good one.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 21:56, June 11, 2019 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay. Here's a link to your category page. You can add a brief blurb (1-2 sentences) about yourself there for people visiting the page. I also fixed up some of the capitalization and punctuation issues I found (typically involving dialogue tags) and added credit on the stories you posted here that you listed on your user page. Have a good one.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:41, June 11, 2019 (UTC)

Notice #1

Your story Momma's Boy has been deleted as it directly uses content (even ripping lines and images directly from the material) from other IPs without any citation or accreditation. The main one being the Cyanide and Happiness short linked above. This message is going to serve as your only warning on the matter. I don't need to inform you how seriously we take plagiarism on this wiki. We debated issuing a six month ban and deletion of all your stories due to this grossly unethical and detrimental behavior.

Instead calmer heads prevailed and we are instead going to review all of your stories for other instances of plagiarism. I would suggest coming clean if you have anything else otherwise we will issue the full ban if any of your other posts are revealed to be from other sources (this will also include the stories you requested I remove a while back and stories that have been deleted). I would suggest taking this time to reflect. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 16:29, October 2, 2019 (UTC)

While I appreciate the message on my talk page and your sincerity, I will note that it is hard to see this as a subconscious accident given that the story in question used lines verbatim and scenes described as they were depicted down to the detail. Typically when there is an issue like this with someone taking inspiration they're not cognizant of, there are slight similarities and not direct word-for-word line usage. Maybe once in a blue moon, an author will accidentally crib a description through random chance, almost never the entire action-by-action breakdown of characters complete with lines used wholesale.
As for taking your word on whether or not you've used content from other sources without citation, I'm afraid that you really have lost any level of trust I would have to take your words at face-value. I hope you're sincere, but given that we've had issues with plagiarists saying similar things in the past, we're not really taking any chances and will act accordingly. As such, we are still going to review every single one of your stories to make sure you're not taking them from another source.
As for a rough estimate of when we'll be done, all I can say is, when we're good and ready. It's going to take multiple people reading your stories and looking over multiple sources to confirm what you're saying. It could takes weeks, it could take months. I'm not going to put a date on it because it's going to require a lot of digging, research, and recollection to check your writing. It's going to require bureaucrats, admins, and users enlisted to help to pore through your stories. I'm digging through deleted stories and cross-checking them. This is not something that is going to be knocked out in a timely manner because of how dire it is. This isn't something that we can set a date on as, to be honest, it's going to take up a lot of time. I hope you're being sincere, I honestly do. Have a good one, Cornconic/Guy. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:03, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
I'm sorry that this has been inconvenient for you, but the truth is, with finals and other issues going on in my life, I haven't really had the time to clear stories and a lot of managing this and clearing has fallen on my shoulders (as you can see by the few times your stories have been cleared). I also don't really have this put as the top priority in terms of site managing/maintenance so the day-to-day things like quality checking stories, patrolling the site, and reviewing edits/comments/etc. will typically be dealt with first. I also decided to start with your deleted stories first and work my way forward chronologically so a majority of the progress has been under the surface.
We have multiple users looking over your stories, but as such, we do need to reach a consensus on things. A story like Bad Behaviour which one person pointed out seems to be inspired by a screen grab from Reddit/4chan about a woman showing aborted fetuses to discipline their child and your latest story in the writer's workshop has some similarities to a writing prompt from a few years back has led to some concerns and debate about inspiration vs. plagiarism. While it is not unethical to use a prompt from a contest or to take inspiration from something, it does widen the pool of content we now have to sort through to make sure you're not cribbing ideas from other places without citation and now requires more looking into.
As for the length of stories being a factor in the plagiarism checking process, that doesn't really matter much as we're looking at the plot and premise themselves. While these stories may not take lines directly from the source, if they directly use a premise from that source and fail to cite them, that is an issue. As for a rough estimate, I can't give one as I can't predict my schedule. I'll try to work on it more over break but that being said, this isn't a top priority in terms of site functionality and I will be working in a clinic over break so that too has more focus. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 13:57, December 8, 2019 (UTC)
As is the case for all stories posted to the website, they get checked to make sure they're not plagiarized from other sources, are up to standards, and fit the criteria of a horror story. They likely won't be marked for review unless the person reviewing it feels like there's a reason why it needs to be reviewed (QS, ToU violations, possible cribbing of material, etc.). EmpyrealInvective (talk) 17:54, December 27, 2019 (UTC)

Narration Request: The After Party

Hi. I really enjoyed The After Party and was wondering if I could narrate it on my YouTube channel. I will be happy to acknowledge you as the author, and would like to leave a link to your site in the description to promote your other work. Hope to hear from your you soon.

Jagged Aingeal (talk) 04:15, December 28, 2019 (UTC)Jagged Aingeal

Jagged Aingeal Channel Link

Video downloaded. Thanx again. :)


Jagged Aingeal (talk) 04:15, December 28, 2019 (UTC) Jagged Aingeal

Narration Request: No Place for the Dead

Hello again! I also really liked No Place for the Dead. Mind if I narrate that one, too?

Jagged Aingeal (talk) 04:15, December 28, 2019 (UTC) Jagged Aingeal

Narrator's Heads Up (with video link)

Hey, how are you? I happened to see a reply in a thread about you being open to your stories for narration.

I’m new to here, as well as my YT channel, but not new to the industry/digital space.

I’m looking for stories to narrate, and am giving full credit and links back to your stories as well.

I want to make sure that I abide by the “writer's code”, and give back to where the credit is due.

I’ve uploaded my first video today on my channel if you want to take a look, to make sure that my style and voice will fit with your writing.


Let me know if you’d be cool with me doing some of your stories. If you have any words of advice, I’d love to hear them.


DustandDark (talk) 02:59, January 4, 2020 (UTC)

Useless Link

Upload complete.


Anniversary Narration Link

Hey Cornconic, as per our talk a few days ago, I narrated one of your stories. I chose Anniversary as the first one. 
I hope you like it. I gave you full credit, as well. 

Here it is, if you want to take a listen. I hope you think I did it justice.


DustandDark (talk) 21:55, January 7, 2020 (UTC)

Vermin Narration Link

Hey Cornconic, 

I just wanted to let you know I did another narration of one of your stories. 

I hope you like it. 


I can't wait to do some more of yours. 

Thanks, and again, I hope you think I did it justice. 

DustandDark (talk)

Eggs and Bacon Narration Link

Eggs and Bacon

All done. Might do it again to be less dramatic toward the end, but anyways, here it is my man.

Dont mind me. Ill just be here digging through your bins. 16:11, February 5, 2020 (UTC)

Trashbinrat (talk) 16:20, February 5, 2020 (UTC)

Trashbinrat 16:24, February 5, 2020 (UTC)

Author's Plea

I found and fixed my mistakes so don't delete my page, okay?

Notice #2

Your comment on Lohse's thread has been removed. I'm going to ask you to refrain from commenting and providing advice if you are unable to control your pettiness and desire to snipe at other users. Using single quotes to belittle someone's experience ("judging on how 'difficult' it's been for you to even write it in the first place") when you have no frame of reference for what they may be experiencing is pointlessly instigatory and seems to be made from a place where you're looking to get a rise out of them. It seems to be a recurring theme here.

Failure to do so will be treated as drama-baiting as that is what it was. I suggest you take some time to reflect and figure out why you're needling other users. Failure to do so and trying to start internet slap fights will result in a temporary ban as it's childish and not conducive to helping authors improve. If you find you're unable to provide feedback without belittling someone, then I'm going to suggest reflecting on why that is. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 15:04, April 14, 2020 (UTC)

"You don't know my life. You think I've never had family issues before?" And yet, you're more than fine taking potshots at someone who has had similar experiences? I'm sorry, but having that experience in your past is not a freebie to be a jerk. The other comment you made that day implied a user (who failed to follow the writer's workshop guidelines and was given a day long ban after a warning) was going to get perma-banned based off of their posts and actively undercut them. I've had two separate people message me/other admins about whether or not we should intervene due to your comments and how pointlessly pithy they've been recently. Your responses are not just an issue from my perspective. Your peers on this site have also brought this up.
I'm also not going to leave a comment up that is blatantly trying to shit-stir so that when it does inevitably blow up into drama, it's too late to minimize the impact of you needling someone pointlessly. Given how your previous comment was received, I really hope you can realize how needless it was to return with a barb wrapped up in advice that had already been given to them. If not, then I do honestly think you need to spend time thinking about how you interact with people because it isn't likely to help anyone improve their writing if you're also talking down to them. Diminishing them when you have zero evidence that their experience wasn't traumatizing is instigating and does nothing to further the discussion. Trying to say that you also offered advice while insulting them is counter-intuitive and diminishes the feedback you were trying to give them.
The purpose of the writer's workshop and site questions forum (really, the whole site) is not to gate-keep and treat other people poorly from some misconceived sense of elitism. Our goal is to read well-written stories and help authors to improve. If you're looking to give insults and feedback hand-in-hand by minimizing/downplaying what may be happening to the person while wrapping it up in what someone else has already said, then I honestly think you would be better off not providing feedback if that's the only way you think you can help. If you are unable to give someone feedback without being a dick to that person, then that person is better off without your feedback. I honestly hope you're mature enough to realize that you can weigh in on someone's story without trying to under-cut them. I think you can help people improve, but the way you're proceeding now by needling people is not the way. Now, as I have an exam tomorrow, I'm going to be heading off. Have a good one. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:36, April 17, 2020 (UTC)

Thank You Message

Thank you for reading my story and leaving such positive feedback, that's very kind of you! Have a great day! 

Re: WW Story Review

Sure thing. I'll try to look at it tonight or tomorrow. RedNovaTyrant (talk) 22:45, May 4, 2020 (UTC)

Narration Request: Little Birdie

Hey! I just read your pasta "Little Birdie" and absolutely loved it! I host a narration channel on YouTube called TheCreepingHour . I was wondering if I could read the poem there? You'd be fully credited, of course. Thanks in advance!

TheCreepingHour (talk) 08:41, May 6, 2020 (UTC) 

Narration Request: Anniversary

Hello, Cornconic!

My name is Lucy Kay, aka Spirit Voices, and I’m a horror narrator on YouTube. You can find my channel here: https://www.youtube.com/c/SpiritVoices/. It’s great to meet you!

I was just browsing the Wiki when I came across your story “The Anniversary.” It’s a truly amazing read, and I’d really like to narrate it for my channel, if you’d let me do so! I can probably get it out within the next few weeks or so, and of course I’d send you the link as soon as it’s done if you agree.

Please let me know what you think, and thank you very much in advance for your consideration.


SpiritVoices (talk) 02:50, May 10, 2020 (UTC)

Anniversary Narration Link

Edit: Hi, Cornconic! I just wanted to let you know that your video was released yesterday! :) Thank you so, so much for letting me narrate it! It was so fun to do!

I hope you enjoy it!


SpiritVoices (talk) 02:11, May 21, 2020 (UTC)

Little Birdie Narration Link

Hey, Cornconic! CreepingHour here again. I was just letting you know that my narration of "Little Birdie" is up! Thanks so much for letting me use your poem, I really love the mood of it. Thanks again!

TheCreepingHour (talk) 23:48, May 10, 2020 (UTC)

Spanish Narrations Request

Hi Cornconic, I wanted to thank you for your stories and also ask for your permission to narrate them in spanish. I'm still in the starting phase of getting the authors ok's, but my plan is to translate them and narrate them in my mother tongue.

Arg.naut (talk)Arg_naut

Thread Closure

The thread was closed to keep things from getting any further out of hand. Criticism was successfully levied, after all. I even saw it, as you should know from the fact that I closed the thread. What there isn't a need for is what I foresaw which is things getting wildly out of hand from there.

Was what was said within the realm of reasonability? That's arguable in both directions, but was it also reasonable to make a whole thread telling us there were 11 threads in both M4R and Delete Now combined? That, too, is debatable. We are all, after all, volunteers with our own lives, jobs, etc. and not all of out time is devoted to here.

And, for the record, if that same reply was posted by anyone else it would not be removed, at least not by myself. After ten years of doing this, I am no stranger to criticism...and even some of it justified. I will always encourage open discourse most events. However, the thread in question was quickly spiraling out of control from where I saw it. Empy replied with a bit too much snark, yes, but your subsequent two replies were more inflammatory as you accused him of power pearl-clutching. It is for that reason that the thread was closed.

ClericofMadness (talk) 00:15, May 12, 2020 (UTC)

RE: The Angelica Incident

Hey Cornconic,

I am a bit busy at the moment, but I will try to get to it later today or tomorrow. I don't do too many reviews, but it should be fun. Looking forward to seeing what ya did with the story. What, no silly jokes? Nope, not today. d:

Kolpik (talk) 16:30, May 15, 2020 (UTC)

Minor Ticks
I've leaked it. All of it. The entire library, every little detail you wanted censoring (censored) over the years. All of the information you tried so hard to stash away, it's all out there for everyone to see. And that's how it's going to stay. Within the hour, there'll be riots in the streets of Nightfall. People will finally know the truth about all these files, all these experiments and psychological programs, all the fucked-up secretive shit you've gotten away with for so long.
As a captain, it was my responsibility to protect my crew. For a while, I blamed myself for what happened that day, but then I realised. (nix that period and shrink that i) It was you. It was always you.
I'm opening the airlocks. And don't worry, I am nearby. I don't want to keep on living after all this. I want to be part of my crew again.
And I want you to realise this (is) all the fault of your own negligence. Your endless corner cutting, budget saving, never spending a penny more than the absolute minimum. It's how you got to where to (you) are now. (Enjoyed the double meaning there) You could make back the cost of the Angelica in a day, if that. If you hadn't been so endlessly stingy, none of this would've happened. But it's too late to do anything about that now.
My Thoughts
Originally, I had two interpretations of the story. Either McKennedy went nuts and imagined his crew was possessed or they really were possessed and he took matters into his own hands. Either way, havoc ensues and I was left to decipher for myself what really happened. After all, outer space is vast and mysterious. Who knows wtf is really out there? What happens in outer space, stays in outer space... hopefully.
I enjoyed your first version, but now you've added a new element, revenge. Is McKennedy's actions against Samuel justified? I don't think it matters, but it's an interesting question. Are his actions due to the errant signal messing up his brain or does he blame Samuel for his crew getting possessed? It's another good question and I like a story that makes me wonder.
Although, I don't think the new ending is necessary, I do like it. However, may I suggest a little tweaking? You see, I have a teeny, tiny issue with Captain McKennedy showing up just as Samuel is about to delete the file. I suppose you could chalk it up to coincidence and leave it at that, but perhaps you could nix that part.
It might be cool if Samuel triggered the events that come next when he chose to delete the file. What if McKennedy programmed a trap before he joined his crew that would deliver his message to Samuel, leak the files, and take the poor bastard out? Eh, it's just a thought. Pay me no mind.
Anyway, I hope this helps. Feel feel to message me if you want to pick my brain a bit more about the story or something else.
On another note, was it you that posted a story in the Writers Workshop a year or two ago involving a kid in a dumpster getting squished? Forgive my fuzzy memory if that wasn't your story. However, if it was, did you ever finish it? If not, do you intend to? I have this idea you might find interesting. What if the dumpster had a Narnia wardobe type set up and dumped the kid into the den (maze-like or otherwise) of some sinister creature that lies in wait for dumpster divers. Um... just a thought.
Kolpik (talk) 12:06, May 17, 2020 (UTC)

Page Deletion Request Response

The stories you requested to be removed have been deleted. Feel free to let me know if there's anything else you need. Have a good one.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:32, June 5, 2020 (UTC)

Walsh: M4R

Hey! I saw you marked my story for deletion (which is fair), I'd like some feedback on what's wrong with it specifically and how I can improve. I did post this message before, but I fucked up the formatting and now I'm retyping it, thanks in advance.

NoHappyEndings (talk) 13:38, June 27, 2020 (UTC)NoHappyEndings


I just read your comments on a user's blog and I'm left wondering if, when you read Cleric's blog on users being toxic, harassing other people, and generally instigating, if you didn't take a moment to realize that Ned's behavior which led to him being banned applies to you as well.

This wiki will no longer tolerate people being shitty for no real reason to other users. This type of behavior has been pretty consistent with you in the past. You were warned about this previously. It's a three hour ban. The next time it happens, it will be much longer. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 15:20, July 6, 2020 (UTC)

Re: Discord

Feel free to drop me an email (on my gmail which is the same as my handle here) and I'll provide a link. It's currently a closed server iirc that requires a link as it's mainly older users made a few years back. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 03:44, July 8, 2020 (UTC)

Narration Request: Light of My Life


I'm a narrator on the Creepy podcast. I came across your story, 'Light of My Life' and would love to narrate it for the show. Would that be ok?


Heather N. Thomas (talk) 21:56, July 11, 2020 (UTC)Heather N. Thomas


Hey Cornconic,

So I went through and gave a review of what I thought. Most of what I've pointed out isn't the same things that normally get pointed out when I give a review. You don't have too many spelling errors or punctuation problems. There were a few places where a word or two were omitted, but I didn't mention them, the review took a lot longer than I had expected. With that being said, I didn't give a half-assed review either. Take it with a grain of salt, most of it is just opinion. There's a good chance that you didn't get a review on that story because of the length, which may put people off. I don't know how many of the writer's I've known when I was more active on this site are still around, but those were the people who really helped a lot. With that being said, if you have any more stories you'd like help with, feel free to reach out to me.


JohnathanNash (talk) 19:36, August 19, 2020 (UTC)

Wounded & Anniversary Narration Link

Hello! A long time ago when i first started on this site, i made a conversation post and you had commented that I could read your stories. Well, I finally got around to doing so. I narrated two of them "Wounded" and "Anniversary", and put them in one video. 

Here's the link: https://youtu.be/cbdSrWkanLg 

I hope you enjoy, and thank you for sharing your fantastic story here on the wiki for us! 

AsTheRavenDreams (talk) 00:14, September 21, 2020 (UTC)

Narration Request: The Poison Sky

Hi, Cornconic!

This is Spirit Voices again; you may remember me from narrating your story "Anniversary" back in May! Nice to talk to you again!

I'm doing a Halloween video this year which will be a short story compilation. I know on your last comment on my page you gave me blanket permission to narrate your stories buuuut I always feel uncomfortable without actually asking, so--I was wondering if I could read your story "The Poison Sky" in this video! It's an awesome story and I'd just love to include it. :)

Thank you so much in advance for your consideration (again)!


SpiritVoices (talk) 18:17, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Re: A Number Of Things

Fixed the poem tag, it seemed to be missing the concluding part of the tag (you can check in the edit history to see what I added).

As for videos: Here's a guide on adding videos. If you'd like to cut out the middle man and get a direct link to uploading videos, you can click this link and add a video using the add a video button in the upper right. From there, it's a matter of just using the text layout as seen here to add your video onto the page itself using the file name the video is uploaded under. Hope that helps. Please let me know if you need any more help. Unfortunately, I'm a bit busy this week so it may take a bit of time to troubleshoot other problems.EmpyrealInvective (talk) 11:42, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

When adding a video here, you should have the option of changing the title here so it doesn't match and replace the original. Looking at your contributions, it appears you are replacing the original and then double posting it to the page. I can look at it later this weekend if you're still having problems with it. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 12:42, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
I just re-titled one: https://creepypasta.fandom.com/wiki/File:%22The_Almond_Tree%22_Creepypasta_by_Cornconic and uploaded the other in its place: https://creepypasta.fandom.com/wiki/File:%22The_Almond_Tree%22_Creepypasta?redirect=no. That should fix the issue. Sorry for the delay. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 00:36, 16 January 2021 (UTC)


Hey there,

I tried leaving feedback on your story. No idea if I did it right. This new website confuses the hell out of me. In any event, covering all my bases, so below is yet again the feedback I tried to post: I really enjoyed this. The story and the character voice are spot on, and I honestly never knew what to expect. You successfully took an old style of storytelling and made it fresh. Really nice work on that!

As I say in my subject line, there are only some minor mechanical glitches that need fixing, and you can easily find these with a proofread or, my favorite, sending it through a TTS reader. For instance, one sentence was clearly missing a word. Also, there are some places where your wording could be more economical. One place that sticks out is "we are always in requirement of" which could simply be shortened to "we require." There was at least one more spot like that, so I suggest just giving it a careful read over.

Honestly, other than those things, I'd say it's golden. If I had to suggest anything to bulk up the plot, I'd say maybe give us a clearer sense of what the patient may have thought she was signing up for, but I really didn't miss it. Good stuff overall and good to hear from you!

J. Deschene (talk) 01:45, 25 February 2021 (UTC)

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