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LOLSKELETONS (talk) 01:06, August 13, 2013 (UTC)

Story deletion

Your story has been deleted because it shows excessive use of clichés, or it follow a storyline that makes it generic, compared to other pastas. Please revise your story accordingly and pass the new version through Deletion Appeal, to see it back in the wiki.

DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again without any major changes, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules.

Read {{#NewWindowLink:How to Write Creepypasta|this guide}} for further details on how you can improve your story/stories to make them meet our quality standards.

LOLSKELETONS (talkcontrib) 01:10, August 13, 2013 (UTC)

PLEASE BE AWARE:

You have been given an automatic 1 day block from editing because you have not updated the {{#NewWindowLink:Creepypasta Wiki:Article Listing|Article Listing}} with your new story/stories. This has become a MAJOR problem, and seeing as ALL THE RULES AND REGULATIONS are posted to your talk page as soon as you edit a page (AND I KNOW YOU GET NOTIFICATION OF THIS), there is no logical excuse not to have updated it.

See {{#NewWindowLink:Project:Site Rules/The Article Listing|the rules on the Article Listing}} and {{#NewWindowLink:Project:Article Listing/Tutorial|the Article Listing tutorial}} for more information.

Sloshedtrain Talk Contribs http://i1309.photobucket.com/albums/s640/sloshedtrain/universe-slosh_zps6da7cc40.gif 04:07, September 6, 2013 (UTC)

Story deletion

Your story has been deleted because it doesn't meet the wiki's quality standards. If you feel that it did meet the standards, please state your case on Deletion Appeal. Make sure you follow the instructions to the letter there, or your appeal will be automatically denied.

DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules.

Read the Deletion FAQ and our Style Guide for Writing for details on the 'what' and 'why' of the deletions we make.

Read this guide and these blog posts for further details on how you can improve your story/stories to make them meet our quality standards.

For additional help, submit your story to the Writer's Workshop for feedback.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 05:02, December 6, 2014 (UTC)

Story deletion

Your story has been deleted because it doesn't meet the wiki's quality standards. If you feel that it did meet the standards, please state your case on Deletion Appeal. Make sure you follow the instructions to the letter there, or your appeal will be automatically denied.

DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules.

Read the Deletion FAQ and our Style Guide for Writing for details on the 'what' and 'why' of the deletions we make.

Read this guide and these blog posts for further details on how you can improve your story/stories to make them meet our quality standards.

For additional help, submit your story to the Writer's Workshop for feedback.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:12, June 29, 2015 (UTC)

Re-uploaded story

Please don't re-upload your deleted story. It is against the rules. If you feel your story is well-written or meets the Quality Standards, make a case on deletion appeal or post it into our Writer's Workshop for comprehensive user review. If you re-upload a deleted pasta again, you will receive a 1-day suspension from editing.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:35, June 29, 2015 (UTC)

Re: Story

The story was almost unreadable due to coding errors that made the text the same color as the background: <p style="color:rgba(0,0,0,0.701961);font-family:UICTFontTextStyleBody;font-size:17px;line-height:normal;-webkit-composition-fill-color:rgba(130,98,83,0.0980392);text-decoration:-webkit-letterpress;">I've been dragged into hell.</p> was how the story looked in editor mode on every line.

I viewed it in editor mode so I could read it and that is where I found a number of issues with wording, story, and punctuation. Please note I won't grab every example as that coding is on every line and it makes it very hard to copy/paste.

Wording issues: "I saw that I (it) had a long face.", "The thing was whitish and it beared (sic) a menacing height." (Additionally a lot more description is needed than white and tall with a long face.), "My heart ached for a moment as I stated (stared) at their honest eyes." (Additional awkward phrasing), "My heart beated (beat) more and more faster when I heard low voice". "Before I did fall into deep sleep after a long time attempting to, I heard several spaced creaks." Awkward phrasing. "I felt a grab on my leg and soon came a push." Pull. works better in the situation as earlier lines imply you were dragged not pushed or shoved.

Fragmented sentences: "In an asylum."Avoid these at all costs as it makes the story come off as unfinished/a rough draft.

Story issues: the story is incredibly rushed and you try to break into the horror elements with little to no build-up. "Recently though, I came in contact with an evil spirit that I saw on the ground of the farm." (That line just comes off as nonchalant and out-of-place with the tone you were going for.)

Cliches: " I saw myself on a crucifix burning endlessy, crying blood." Avoid bloody tears, it's been done to death. (As have black/red eyes.) Hell is also very nondescript and needs a lot more to build the scene and horror. There's a lot of description missing from this story giving it a very anemic feel.

The ending: "There were no funny cat videos. There was no video games. There weren't any comedy films to cheer you up. No one ever existed. Not your mother, not your father. Nothing did. Emptiness. That's the real hell." This really just seems tacked on as you spent earlier sections describing hell. It seems like you wanted to end it more cerebrally, but hadn't really steered the story in that direction or foreshadowed it. The story feels rushed, there are numerous wording issues, cliches, and story issues. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:55, June 29, 2015 (UTC)

You have to make a deletion appeal unless it is complete re-written and altered from the original. See the message above: "DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again without any major changes, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules." As without this rule, we'd have users making minor changes to the story and reuploading them. I'd strongly suggest taking it to the Writer's Workshop and revising it before making an appeal and attaching a copy (using pastebin) or a link to the WW. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 11:46, June 29, 2015 (UTC)
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