I need help

I need some constructive criticsm on this first short creepypasta draft, its not been reviewed yet. https://creepypasta.fandom.com/wiki/Forum:Smiley_The_Clown?t=20201214014400

I released a new story but needs some constructive criticism and some help, (link bellow) https://creepypasta.fandom.com/wiki/Forum:Forest_51

Story deletion

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There were frequent awkward wording/homophone errors, capitalization (not properly capitalizing sentences), punctuation (punctuation missing from dialogue and improperly used in sentences), grammatical (it's=it is, its=possession. There=indicatory, they're=they are, their=possession), run-on sentences, and plot issues (mainly involving the story's pacing, descriptive elements, and plot holes) which resulted in your story not meeting our quality standards. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:13, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

There are more issues than just the mechanical ones (see above). I would suggest heavily revising your story and getting feedback on the writer's workshop if you plan on making an appeal. Posting the story again without an appeal will result in its deletion and a temporary ban as per our site rules. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:22, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Story deletion

Your story has been deleted because it doesn't meet the wiki's quality standards. If you feel that it did meet the standards, please state your case on Deletion Appeal. Make sure you follow the instructions to the letter there, or your appeal will be automatically denied.

DO NOT ATTEMPT TO REUPLOAD YOUR PASTA. If you upload it again, you'll receive a 1-day ban from editing, as per the rules.

Read the Deletion FAQ and our Style Guide for Writing for details on the 'what' and 'why' of the deletions we make.

Read this guide and these blog posts for further details on how you can improve your story/stories to make them meet our quality standards.

For additional help, submit your story to the Writer's Workshop for feedback.


A number of the issues I listed above were present in this story as well. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:19, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Writer's Workshop

Please refrain from making multiple drafts for stories on the WW as it tends to clog the feed. You can update the original thread or leave the new version in a comment on the thread if you want people to make comparisons. I removed your new thread. Please let me know if you didn't have a copy saved and I can provide one. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 07:35, 19 December 2020 (UTC)

It's Jake and It's ok, i got a copy saved and i understand why it was deleted, it's ok.

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