Oh the puns!! Who in their right mind would set in a 230 degree room? That's incredible on multiple levels (stupidity mostly). I'd say they're just lucky there weren't any cannibals around, or they might have witnessed one of those events that can't be unseen. I wonder if the surviving competitor has a flashback every time they smell cooking flesh? As for the woman cutting off the internet - I'm just shocked that something like that could even be possible. I'd be willing to bet there was a significant spike in violent crime that day due to lack of porn and not being able to check the weather (Magazines? What are magazines? Like those things that hold bullets?). And yes, there is a major issue with copper theft here as well. Meth and pills seem to make people willing to do anything, no matter what the danger. I sleep with a 9mm in arm's reach because I'm expecting them to start busting down doors any day now. If it happens, they'll be in for a nasty surprise - "Say 'ello to ma' lil' friend!!" I've been practicing my Tony Montana impression for when the time comes. Thanks for the cringes and laughs.
Reply to Uncle Grandpa Message
I appreciate your help and contribution to my story! Of course I'm still working on it, but I am making it point to watch any and all episodes over and over to make sure I don't miss much! And trust me, I always thought Pizza Steve was an A-Hole, hence why I thought of a little brother figure taking advantage of a disabled older brother to boost his ego. Again, thank you so much! KattianaKitty (talk) 11:51, March 23, 2015 (UTC)
Here's a little something from me to you. I thought you'd be interested. If you have a drawing request, don't be afraid to ask. I appreciate the help. I wish you luck with your stories.
I just thought I stop by and say thanks,
Here is just a rough sketch. Sorry for the bad quality, I had taken it with my camera. The anatomy that I was going for is really confusing. I pictured the creature with a twisted foot.
It's been a loooong tiiiime!
Heyy, Raidra! It’s Tyber!
I’m sorry that I’ve been absent for so long. I’ve been wrapped up in so many projects, so I probably won’t be on as frequently for a while. I saw that you made 200 consecutive days on the Wiki! Good job! Unfortunately I wasn’t able to get to you until now, but I’ve made something for the occasion.
I hope you like it. I hope you’ve been doing well since I’ve been gone. I read the short story you posted on my Talk Page. I thought it was pretty funny. Was it something that your father had told to you? Either way, I think that you should try to post it on Trollpasta. It’ll bring some class to an ordinarily ridiculous environment xD
So, I’ve been obsessed with the Dead Space franchise, lately. So much so that I went out and bought some supplies; I plan on building the Intermediate Engineer Resource Integration Gear that is featured in the game. I think it’ll look really rad if and when I get it done. Maybe I’ll post some pictures of my progress!
Anyway, I hope you have a great day.
P.S. – I just noticed that your Talk Page has been archived. Cool! I think I’ll keep mine the way it is. I never grow tired of scrolling down the waterfall of text xD
- Hey, it's great to hear from you! I'd thought about posting a message asking how you were doing because 1) I hadn't heard from you in a while and 2) the last time I posted something to your talk page you didn't respond using the "one-place format" (or whatever you want to call it) like we have been using. It's okay that you can't gab with me as often; I'm just glad to hear you're doing well. I've been well aside from the occasional headache or bout of nausea. Here's some advice - don't eat applesauce that has possibly fermented!
- I do like the picture, thank you. :-D One day, when I was maybe ten years old, the subject of banshees came up, and Dad told me, "Do you know why banshees shriek? They're out there where it's cold and windy, and they wet themselves." That's what led to the story. I'm glad you liked it and I'll let you know when I post the story to Trollpasta. So you think it'll class up the place, huh? Sweet! Good luck on the gear-building and all your other projects. Remember, I'm pullin' for ya! We're all in this together. Raidra (talk) 23:51, April 1, 2015 (UTC)
I haven't worked on any of my stories in a long time. I've been putting it off, I guess I feel like it's a chore for me.
Have you ever felt like that?
I also think this video (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vg_Xgc3Ni-4) would have made 'Jeff the Killer' possibly good.
Mind Taking a Look at a Pasta?
I just wrote a short pasta, and I'm not completely sure about the quality of it. I'd appriciate it if you could take a look. Here it is: Tyler's Loop AGrimAuxiliatrix1 (talk) 01:47, April 2, 2015 (UTC)
Whoa, just whoa! I just found out about this and this happened just really recently. This girl tried to kill her own mother for taking away her IPhone by putting Bleach in a smoothie she made for her mom. Really? Did this really happen?
Well, I spent a whole night up, so I am pretty irritable. But, still, this girl is crazy! Twelve-years-old, that's how old she is! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SEU562KiEnI
What do you think of this girl? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LT9XSkkKmho
Would you put this girl, Cyntoia in the same group with the twelve-year-old girl? I think I should take a break from ghost documentaries and murder documentaries, because they are depressing.
It's the weekend, so I am probably going to work on my stories. Most of them are bad to mediocre. I am having trouble finding one story of mine, called 'WeKill.com,' the story was on the Writer's Workshop of this site's forums.
There's also a story I had from a childhood dream I had. Apparently, this scientist had to preform some sort of surgery-like experiment on somebody, who in turn was his infant/toddler son. He ended up preforming the experiment, his son appeared to look like a mix between a chimp and a human. I think the scientist did something to his son's chromosomes or something. The surgery wound up backfiring and the kid died as a result.
I remember thinking that the boy was buried at the church graveyard across the street from my step-grandma's house.
Is this normal?
I remember AdamTheMop posting the same comment from yesterday in response to Death Scribe's question about Madame Macabre. It says his response was posted just an hour ago. Is something up with the site's timesetting or something? Maybe, I am juist getting freaked out over nothing. Maybe, it's one of those moments of Deja Vu.
Man, that's weird about the college building. I'd probably lose to you in a race.
I have had Deja Vu regarding certain people. There was this one black guy that I saw at a grocery store, I felt like I knew him from somewhere. It turns out that he was my camp counselor on a camp that I visited later.
This camp also had a cabin named after Star, a girl that had drowned while on a picnic trip with her church.
My mom also had premonitions, one time when she was like five or something; she saw her late grandfather in a place and he reminded her of a balloon. It turned out when she was in her twenties, I think before she had me. She visited her grandfather at a nursing home, he was all ballooned up due to Diabetes and he later died due to the disease.
She's told me other creepy stories like that from her childhood, mostly when my little half-sister and/or me got into trouble. She was a pretty scary when she was upset and my mom also had some crazy ideas in regard to punishment, but that's another story.
I worry about her and my sister.
My family is really weird. My mom also introduced me and my sister to seances and Ouiji Board sessions. Of course, nothing happened to us like what she said happened to her. She said that her friend and a black guy that went to school with her named Junior decided to do a seance. My mom had a skating rink all to herself, because the owners let her and her friends look after it that night. My mom, her friend and Junior sat around a table, I think. I don't know how they did the seance, but anyways, they attempted to call up the devil.
The room was dimly lit and my mom said that she saw Junior turn white as a sheet, while her eyes and her friend's eyes turned different colors. My mom's eyes, supposedly turned yellow, and the only time she said when that normally happens is when she wears anything like clothing or jewelry that causes her eyes to look yellow. Her friend's eyes turned red.
She also said that they saw a red shadow walking on the walls of the room they were doing the seance in. Junior fled the skating rink and ended up not talking to my mom and possibly my mom's friend after that. I think my mom said she and her friend laughed when Junior turned white and ran out of the room.
She doesn't like me bringing up this story. I have a reputation as a loudmouth.
What do you think about The Devil Seance? I am kinda doubtful like I am when my mom and her current boyfriend at the time said that they saw a light show and my dog and my sister's Lhah Apso puppy disappeared for a bit. I did a few seances and Ouiji Board sessions. The only thing that ever happened to me was seeing a silhouette of a Native American out in the packed sunroom that sat in front of the room I slept in at the time.
I was also accused of moving the pointer, those accusations were pretty understandable since I moved the pointer in reality. I didn't grasp the whole concept of the game and whenever I wasn't moving it, it just stood still. There were a couple of things like my sister, my mom's boyfriend's daughter and me contacting a spirit of a little girl. There was also us 'contacting' this spirit named Andrew, he claimed he was the brother of my mom's boyfriend's daughter in a past life. He told her that she had died in a car wreck and this really freaked the girl out since she had strange feelings regarding cars.
But, the most of the spirits that we 'contacted' was an angry male. He apparently committed suicide after his girlfriend broke up with him. He had nowhere to go and no family to rely on, so he wound up dying in the only place that provided a roof over his head: his girlfriend's apartment. I think his family disowned him for some reason. He really didn't want to talk to us, so he said, "Leave me alone! Goodbye!" on the Ouiji Board, well he spelled it out.
There was also this creepy face that I saw in the closet, I think it was a reflection. My mom's boyfriend, his daughter and his family claimed there was a demon that haunted the room along with a poster that had a goat-headed, Satanic pentagram on it. He really had a knack of terrifying us, which I hated. Hypocritical of me since I was known to be a huge instigator towards my half-sister and the rest of my family at the time. I was obsessive of doing seances and Ouiji Boards at that time.
My mom's boyfriend at the time claimed that there was a violent, old man that haunted the room she slept in at the time. He also claimed there was a girl's body buried up in the ceiling of the room that he and my mom slept in at the time. My mom's boyfriend also claimed that his late grandma haunted his house since his parents and siblings used to live with him at that house. There was a creepy Virgin Mary Statue in the backyard.
I had some things happen to me there, it's a long story. But, the supernatural stuff that happened wasn't the scary thing. There was also a seance I did with lit candles. Depending on how the flame goes is how the spirit answers. I think if the flame of the candle goes up, it means yes, but if it stays the same or goes down, it means no. I think that's how it went. The demon I supposedly conjured was named Nick. I had a thing that I used to blame, who I called Nicholas and that was also a relative of my younger half-sister's middle name.
New Tobit story
My newest Tobit story, Tobit: From Love Comes Damnation is posted.
Please check it out.
I just woke up due to a bunch of nightmares. They seemed to have more a twist than this. The first one had me as some evil queen or evil witch or something like that. I put some spell or held my sister of the dream captive. Yet, I pretty much got killed by some knight burning me alive within a castle.
The other one I remember was me being blamed for my dream sister's disappearance in the mall. My parents of the dream forced me to go after her. I found her, but she looked completely different, I mean, she was a pasty-skinned, bald, scrawny man with broken legs and broken arms and there was a lot of green vomit coming out of her chest and her mouth. Her eyes or his eyes or whatever gender this thing was had bloodshot, bulging eyes as well.
I strapped my sister to my back, show my parents in the dream her and there was a cop that they had called. They somehow got my sister to transform back to her old, gorgeous self and the cop put me in his plane. We took off in the plane and the mall was able to let us fly through it due it being gigantic. I remember my mom in the dream waving happily as I was flying by. I think the cop crashed his plane and I wound up dying with him in the plane crash and my family in the dream just seemed thrilled that I, the apparent demon child was gone.
I have the weirdest dreams, they usually happen to me being with a family. The family in my dreams usually see me as some sort of evil demon. My dream sister or whatever sibling I have in the dream usually gets hurt or something and I get blamed for it. It seems like there is always a tragic ending for me, but a happy ending for my family in the dream. I usually wake up thinking the worse of myself and justifying my family's actions. Which is pretty stupid and a constant theme in my life right now.
I am estranged from my family right now.
My family has known about the dreams. They just seemed to take them lightly. My family sometimes agreed with the dreams.
I have also had numerous hallucinations and recently night terrors. My family thought I was making them up. I guess, it's due to what I went through and my depression. My family does worry about me, but I am talking to my father.
Sisters of Tobit have arrived
My newest Tobit story, Tobit: The Grim Sorority of Tabitha Shaw is posted. Please check it out and leave some feedback!
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Just got your message. Feel free to comment on my talk page or on the story, however you feel comfortable. Looking forward to the feedback.
Need Advice On Redone Prologue of Story
How should I make this beginning shorter and would it be much better if I were just open the story with a short folklore prologue establishing this particular culture and mythology, as well describing the creation of the particular world and its animals.
Thank you for all the kind words, it means a lot. I do watch a lot of news and am pretty well aware of the horrors that happen in real life, so I incorporate a lot of that into my writing. I am pleased to see that it reflects. Thanks again for appreciating my work.
I do have quite am few non-Tobit stories on my profile. If there are any that you haven't checked out yet, I would certainly love the feedback. A couple suggestions:
Secret Bar -My first pasta!
Joe Montana Saves the Princess -One of my personal favorites.
Love Always -Short but disturbing.
If you get a chance, I would appreciate some feedback on those.
Thank you for the view into the other side of the story. It's much appreciated, and somewhat what I had thought (I guessed she had been a mother). I was by no means 'ripping' on cliff hangers, although I don't think you thought that either. Just a healthy/unhealthy fear of the unknown has left me disliking them lol. I look forward to looking into more of your stories.
I am back. It seems like the wiki keeps logging me out every time I come in.
So, have you ever heard of 'In the Fuhrer's Face?' It was made in the 1940s by Disney. It featured Donald Duck as a nazi; it was a parody, poking fun at Adolf Hitler and the Axis Powers.
It was certainly more entertaining than 'Barefoot Gin.' Gosh, that 1980s film was scary, considering the rotting away of the people and animals hit by the American bomb. It certainly delivered on the horrors of WW2 and how Gin, the main protagonist and his mom struggle to survive after watching their family die in a fire and Gin losing his infant sister to starvation. I admire his dedication to helping himself and his mother survive.
Yep, you can watch Barefoot Gin and that Donald Duck cartoon on Youtube.
I cannot seem to find the book. I am hoping I get my computer back today.
Why am I such a jinx? I heard the saying, "There are no such thing as coincidences." A couple close to me or have just met me have been in vehicle accidents. One of them my caregiver and her ten-year-old son were in a hit and run. Today my neighbor's boyfriend was in a wreck of some kind and my neighbor is freaking out.
That thought scares me about being a jinx. Can you imagine if somebody did a creepypasta with the main character being the catalyst for bad luck and when she offs herself, auto accidents stop happening?
I took my medicine to help me calm down.
I might want to leave out the nutcase that thinks the jinx's ghost is somehow causing the misfortune. I don't know how that belief could be disproven. Butit could be more than one person that believes that. There always seems to be some sort of path a group of nuts can take and just think anybody that sees the whole misfortunes as coincidence as inane.
Review Request On Sequel Chapter to The Last Day of October
I really would like very much a review on this story since I'm hoping to get it on the main wiki so I can start on the next chapter > The Last Day of October--Bookstore Horror
Here is a link to game, which I hope helps.
New Tobit Chapter
I got a new Tobit story up, Tobit: Theory of Two that is in need of some feedback. Please check it out when you get a chance!
So, I am having problems logging in on my computer; I got my CPU back.
My depression seems to interfere with my ability to write. I am not sure how I can get the people in Jinx to blame all of their problems on one person. In a day like this, many people seem to throw superstition to the wayside. What should of bad luck occurences should I make for them to blame the protagonist for being bad luck?
Maybe, I am overthinking the whole story and that's what's causing me to get so frustrated.
That's probably a good idea. Man, I wish I could rid of that 'Install black' into my scanner. I am trying to scan something, but because of that message it won't let me. Ugh, I hadn't had this problem before! I have a Brother MFC-240C and I think they stopped making the catridges.
Oh, guess what? I did some drawings while my computer was kaput. I should show them to you some time, possibly when I upload them to Deviantart. I might take pictures of the one that I offered to do, I don't mean to be scary or anything.
Here was the picture I was talking about. Sorry if the picture isn't that great. I had to take a picture of it since my scanner is kaputt.
I think I dubbed the person, the Multi-Limbed Girl. I might continuing coloring her, hopefully I'll find that page tonight.
It looks like my computer's company notice keeps popping up. Payment arrangements have been setup. I'll probably have to go down to the office tomorrow.
I'll probably upload that picture of the Multi-Limbed Girl tonight.
http://ienzo628.deviantart.com/art/M-536096101 Anyways, I did this. What do you think about it?
So, I spent all night looking for my Nintendo 3DS, Pokemon X, Pokemon Y and Pokemon Alpha Sapphire. I am quite tired and irked from this endeavor. It seems I am really a jinx. I hope I can find it and I think my cat will be okay, he decided to grab a meal from my practically empty bowl.
Did you see the picture I did?
I am glad you liked it and I might check that film out.
Thank you always
I understand the strain of reading long pieces, but I hope you'll make an acception for the Tobits...lol. I think I have 3 more chapters to go before the story is told, and I would certainly love for you to finish the journey with me. If you cannot, I understand, but I will continue to let you know when I post a new one, and perhaps one day down the line you can finish the entire story.
As always, thank you for your support and feedback.
I am jinxed, one thing keeps happening after another.
Anyways, my DSL light is red; it has been that way for two days now. I am thinking about getting some new phone jacks, because I have tried everything else.
I am supposed to hear back from a friend yesterday, but she and her friend never came with the promised CPU.
I thought about having a technician come out, but I'd probably have to go behind my payee's back to pay the technician. I have been trying really hard to hear back from her yesterday. I can barely get ahold of her most times and her receptionist comes off as snobby.
Sorry it took awhile to get back to you. I haven't been on much lately. We all know sometimes life happens and the things we love (writing in this case) take a back seat to life obligations. Thanks for the message! It was good to hear from you again. I have ideas for stories just floating around in my head. I'd like your opinions on a follow up story to Pasta Noir. I'm considering the possibility of Chris surviving or Chloe becoming a cop and later a detective. I considered creating her detective persona after a female detective friend I work with. Or perhaps, the story should just be left alone. Not sure yet. What do you think? Blacknumber1 (talk) 15:30, June 7, 2015 (UTC)
I happen to have also been born on May 15th
I was just really upset yesterday. I am sorry if I upsetted you. My head is still hurting from my walk to the mall yesterday.
Thanks. I just had a merry-go-round of crazy for the past four days. Somebody called me when he was reaching for my mom. I am scared of my mom, so I had a long time before I could get off the merry-go-round of crazy.
I should probably add this picture.
I pretty much heard most of these stories all the time. How are you doing today?
My eyes are going nuts right now. I can't seem to keep them focused. Maybe, I suffer from being cross-eyed or something. My mind keeps also warping images. I guess, my mind wants to be scared right now.
Anyways, I can't wait to read them.
Maybe, I should go eat something. I haven't eaten anything all day, just had soda. It's weird that I don't have an appetite. Maybe, the distorted images, the unfocused vision, and my lack of appetite are related?
Do you think Todd's Survival meets quality standards?
My cat is trying to bite me and it's quite irritating. He has food nearby, so he shouldn't be so mouthy. My cat also gets the idea that he is a bullet. He's pretty fast and he tends to run into things. I am hoping he is alright, he is acting normal.
By the way, would you be scared if your cat's scream caused you to transform into this. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LsZOv-ZcrTg
No, it was the cat's screaming that did the trick.
Anyways, there was some creepy guy around my apartment complex. I think he was trying to follow me home or something. He was a tall, lanky, and bald Hispanic man with a black mustache. He wore a sleeveless white shirt and that's most that I recall about him. It really creeped me out that he was close to me, maybe I am paranoid, but you can never be too careful.
'You Can Never Be Too Careful,' yeah, that saying is probably me just being a paranoid prick again.
My birthday's tomorrow!
Have you ever heard of Moon Raven?
Both parts have to deal with Shavis Cravis.
Moon Raven also did a video that I can't find. I think it was titled 'Blue Eyes' or something. It had to deal with two sisters, one brunette and dark-eyed and the other blonde and blue-eyed. The blonde was adored by her family, friends, teachers, boyfriend and everyone for her beauty, intellect, and talent. Her sister, the brunette got ignored and told by everyone, "Why can't you be like your sister?"
She wanted to get revenge on her sister, but instead of the cliche 'killing of the sister,' no the dark-haired girl hung herself. Her sister, the blond worried about her ugly duckling of a sister, because the girl never came to school or answered her cellphone. Her blonde-haired sister found her dead sister's hanging corpse and she tore out her own blue eyes.
Thanks, my ear hurts from water getting in. I might have to see a doctor. What did you think of Moon Raven?
Yeah, I am wondering how I can improve my backgrounds.
I meant in my artwork.
Richard Lopez, he was one scary Bjork fanboy. Viewer discretion is advised!
Richard Lopez was an obsessive of Icelandic singer, Bjork. His family was from Uruguay and his family was Middle Class Americans. He made a home-made bomb that he intended Bjork to open, which would disfigure her. He at first planned for the bomb to give her aids, which he planned to get from a prostitute in the state of Florida where he lived.
The disfigurement was meant for Bjork to be a reminder of Richard. The bomb was stopped by police due to Lopez's videos in September 1996.
Lopez was upset that Bjork was dating a black guy at the time and the bomb possibly disfiguring her could be was probably a punishment in his mind.
He later shaved his head and videotaped his suicide.
.hack//Sign was probably one of the most intense animes of my childhood. It pretty much focuses on a character named Tsukasa. Tsukasa isn't like other characters in the game, because he can't log off. He can access other 'worlds' in the game, which other characters can't access. Tsukasa has a connection to a girl that fell into a coma after playing the game. Her character, Tsukasa took on her consciousness and was used by the AI, Morgana to stop another AI named Aura from awakening.
It would be scary to be blamed for your mom's death and constantly degraded by your step-dad. It would be even scarier in that the video game that you use to escape suddenly turned against you.
There are some days I wish I was stuck in an online video game, because then I can escape from the paranoia that constantly fills my sleep and not have to deal with the constant degrading I went through with my family and that I put myself through today.
I used to be a Christian and I used my religion to try to bring my family together, but we had some falling out. My mom considered quality time to be watching television together. I love my mom, but I hate always being scared that she or someone close to her or ex-boyfriend are 'watching' me.
I would probably do what Tsukasa's creator did and distance myself from my real world self as much as possible.
Escapism can be a scary thing, especially when it is forcefully taken away from you.
I remember having to get on the city bus just to go to school and watch anime at the library. I wished I could have stayed there. I am out of that situation, thankfully. I was closer to my artwork than I was to my family at that time.
Have you ever heard that saying, "Blood is thicker than water.' or 'The Family that sticks together, stays together?"
Sometimes, you're powerless to control your situation. Being powerless is terrifying, especially when you cannot trust anyone for fear that they'll tell on you, then all Hell breaks loose and those undesirable people in your life show up at your door and you nearly have a panic attack.
I know, the commandment 'Honor your mother and your father.'. I also know that 'He who curses mother and father should be put too death.'
Thankfully, we are not living in a second or third world country or even in the times of Jesus. But, just because you had a child, it doesn't mean your child is your slave.
Some parents just go Old Testament on their kids. Enough of my ranting...I do have this spooky habit of not making any noise when I am moving my lips. I picked up from a lip-syncing AI cat in .hack//sign.
It was weird Tsukasa knew what this cat was saying, even though no noise came from it's mouth.
Yeah, that is a problem of anime. I think this was on purpose though, well in the .hack//sign character's role. The character is named Macha.
That's interesting about the parents. Have you ever heard of How to Train Ip a Child by Michael and Debby Pearl?
Macha has no sound coming out of her and yet Tsukasa still understands her.
That is one of things that creeps me out about .hack//sign.
Anyways, the book 'To Train Up A Child' has been involved with the death of four kids. The book says to pull an infant's hair, using outside instruments like plastic tubing on an infant and so many other stuff like withholding food. It has been so long since I have heard anything from the book, but the book makes children out to be these little manipulative monsters. I also watched a video called Butterflies and Backdoors, which could put any creepypasta to shame.
Sorry if this is so long, but it can be pretty entertaining. There are some pretty spooky tales. The one that got me, I might have told you about this, but it has to do with this gray tabby and long-haired cat.
These three dumbasses decided to scare the cat. These dumbasses chased the cat into the street and the poor thing was hit by a car and killed.
The three teenager boys started having some weird things happen to them. At first, it was animals appearing in their house: a rat, a snake, and a dead bird. Then, it escalated to the boys having some weird incidents happen in their house. One of the boys tripped over something, which he swore up and down was a cat. He smashed his and his mom's spaghetti dinner into the wall, the mom was not happy!
The other boy's encounter was a lot more disturbing. He felt something furry on him and he thought he was suffocating. The boys talked to a teacher at the school the other day and the teacher told them that everything going on with them was just in their heads and that the cat's death was the cause.
Something that completely changed their minds. I don't know if I got this right or not, but there were bloody pawprints on the table, leading to the one of the walls. The boys pretty much vowed to ask for the cat's forgiveness and never do what they did to that cat or any other cat for the rest of their lives.
I don't think the cat urban legend was true. I guess, it could be real or fake, depending on how you perceive it. Either way, it's still pretty disturbing of what those three dumbasses did to that cat. I mean, one of the guys actually says it's a good idea to chase the cat, because the cat has a tendency of yowling at night and that seems to keep him up.
Some people don't believe that animals have souls and that animals are just meant to be these things that people can neglect and abuse. Just because, something doesn't have a soul, does it still make it right to treat it badly?
Maybe, that whole 'souls' concept would make an interesting creepypasta.
I actually had a pastor tell a child that animals don't go to heaven when they die. Of course, this upset the kid.
New Tobit Chapter
New Tobit story published, would love some of your feedback.
It just goes to show that no two people are the same. I liked your story, it's kind of opposite to what those three boys did. But, they do have one thing in common: to look after animals.
I can't believe that guy! Poor Snow!
Anyways, I keep thinking I see Mheetu out of the corner of my eye, it turns out it's just my file box.
I feel like I need a nap right now. I tend to get frightened like I am right now. I know there is a chance of my dreams coming out weird as I go to bed. Last night, I dreamed my sister got done with her bath or whatever and I saw the water was like a light murky brown and there were poop stains splattered everywhere.
I guess, I have a strong stomach and it was only a dream. I also found out yesterday that my step-grandma died. I hate calling her that since I grew up with her, but whatever.
I just get frustrated with my drawing. My frustrations have deepen to a point of me wishing death on myself or self-harming myself. That is the thing I am scared of.
I am glad that I am getting ten dollars back from my caregiver tomorrow. I just wish I wasn't so hard on myself.
I am sorry if I upset you.
Yeah, I just feel like I am getting worse. I still have bad memories of my family. There's no such thing as forgive and forget.
Anyways, what's new with you?
I think I need to get out for right now. I am going a little batty being cooped up inside the apartment all day.
Looking forward to it
Looking very forward to your review. You always leave very detailed and useful feedback, and I always appreciate the time and support.
Happy Sunday! Let's see you can stand an hour of 'Hide and Seek.' https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K9VoQX7kIdU
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BMroM8Rc1LE I am also getting this and possibly another one for a friend.
Request For a Critique
I would like some feedback on this beginning sequel I have for The Last Day of October--Bookstore Horror, especially about this particular character's accent. Should I just stick with standard English?
I am having some problems holding my thumb. My internet got turned off and I hate it when I am in the dark about my own finances and what bill gets paid. I need to eat something, because the heat, the hunger, the thirst and exhaustion might be getting to me.
I'm startled right now. I thought somebody broke into my apartment and they were two men, one of them looked like my college level History teacher from high school. He had brown hair, a short beard and sideburns. His buddy was standing next to him, while he was sitting on the same bean bag chair that I am sitting in right now.
The brown-haired guy was complaining about Gold's Gym while his blonde-haired buddy was trying to comfort him. I remember seeing them from bed, but I couldn't move. I think I was dreaming, because when I woke up, they weren't there.
I pretty much turned on all my lights, my computer and opened then locked from door, starting with sliding screen door and finally ending with the bar down. I've calmed down, but this sleep-paralysis/being unable to move is just getting old. This isn't the first time I've dealt with this.
Maybe, I should move, which might be possible in a couple months or so.
How is it going tonight? I am sorry if I scared you the past couple of days ago. I just wanted to wish you a happy 4th of July.
I hope you had a Happy Fourth of July. I seem to be having a short fuse today. My student loan called and I am just getting tired of dealing with them. I have somebody that manages my money, so they should be calling her. I am paranoid as heck right now, because my internet might not get paid, my power might get turned off, my cell phone's bill is coming up, I had to email a seller five times about a desk and he never got back to me, my check is less than usual, I might have to move soon, I need to shampoo my carpet and I am still looking for a desk, because I am tired of using my bean bag chair and coffee table as a desk set.
I also need to lose weight and possibly change banks, due to the amount of bull crap I ran into for the pasr fewmonths.
Man, I finally got my order shipped from Amazon. I can't believe it took three weeks and live chat with an Amazon employee.
http://ienzo628.deviantart.com/art/Incomplete-Vampire-319645217 Anyways, I did this back on my earliest days of Deviantart.
Have you ever heard of kingofhere1?
I had a scary experience last night at three. I had a nightmare about my mom bereating me again and I think I blacked it out. Anyways, I remember screaming my full name at three in the morning.
I regret that happening.
I don't remember the video that I sent you was. I am sorry that I forgot that you wouldn't be on and bombarding you with links, videos and posts. Sorry for everything.
You're never trespassing Girl!
Hey Raidra. Yeah, I can talk about martial arts for days. My whole family gets so annoyed with me so I stopped talking about it around them. Any questions, just ask. I'm also an encyclopaedia of knowledge on the subject. And you are never trespassing dear.Blacknumber1 (talk) 00:05, July 30, 2015 (UTC)
Request For a Review
I have a review request for this new addition to the story already up on the wiki>
Dollar Man and Jealous Older Sister
I just thought of something, can you tell me about your thoughts on it? My younger half-sister and possibly my mom and stepfather blame me forbeing an attention hog. Anyways, on with the story.
I was like a preteen or early teens when my mom and stepdad went to buy this car from this elderly man. My family and myself went there before whenever we were selling or buying a car, I digress. He always complimented my younger half-sister, who is four years younger than me on her blue-green eyes. He would then give her a dollar bill. I was jealous of this and would always have him compliment my eyes and give me a dollar bill. Maybe, this is nothing, but thinking back it was kind of creepy giving a little girl a dollar for her eye color. Am I overreacting to this guy's actions?
My half-sister was always upset with my scary attention seeking and my parents always thought I was making a spectacle out of me. I don't think the old guy was happy with my constant disruptions.
Hey, I just dropped by to say I saw your message on my Talk Page a few days, it's just I haven't replied till now because I've actually been busy writing lately writing another story! So I haven't had much opportunity to reply till now, because I wanted to focus on that.
Anyway, it's called An Illegal Investigation of Ballintully Springs if you want to read it. I read your reply on The Melon Head Illustration as well, and based on that I believe that your feedback would be very much valued.
Anyway, just wanted to finally I really appreciate your supportive message. As well as that, that the theory you told me on The Melon Head Illustration is actually really interesting, I don't think I ever would have thought about it that way. As well, I would love to reread a longer a version of it.
Anyway, thanks again for the support. If you have anything else you want me to read, I'll be more than happy to do it.
Peace. -12:32, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
Desperate Means Calls For Desperate Measures
"Desperate means calls for desperate measures."
I don't know who first said that, but it's one of the sayings that I have forever focused on. I am worried about tomorrow, because I am selling some stuff on Craigslist. I don't want anything horrible to happen, but who is to say that my hope won't be a false one? Bad things happen to anyone. I am pretty nervous about the exchanges I have to do tomorrow, but I am thinking about going with somebody on both exchanges. There's safety in numbers, right?
I don't want to put them at risk, so this is pretty selfish on my part. I hope I am just overreacting, at least it'll be daylight.
I heard one story about some girl, she was born to a Navajo mother and a white father. Her mother died and her father left her as an emotional orphan, because he was a severe alchoholic. So, she set out for acceptance. With her red hair mixed with dark brown, she sought to blend in with her mother's people, but they wouldn't have it.
The girl eventually committed suicide by jumping off a cliff. Her spirit is said to haunt the desert.
I need to lay off the ghost stories and the murder documentaries.
Do you think the people that I was going to meet from Craigslist meant well? One requested batteries for five cents a piece and the other one wanted picture frames and fabric. Both of them never responded back to me.
New Tobit chapter is out, Tobit: Brothers and Sisters. Check it out please and let me know what you think.
Thank you for the glowing review of my latest Tobit chapter.
To answer your question concerning the clown porn scene, no, it was not Family Guy inspired, although I do remember the scene you were talking about from the show.
Again, thank you for reading and reviewing, next installment probably in September, maybe October, just depending on inspiration and scheduling.
Re: I'm 'Grieving'
Welp, SG was the one that brought it to my attention, and we are trying to set a good example for stories on this site. That being said, let us know if you stumble across any other stories in your time here that looks like they might need to be reviewed (or possibly removed). EmpyrealInvective (talk) 19:58, August 24, 2015 (UTC)
- I'll try to give your story a look when I get some time, unfortunately that may take a while as I'm juggling a few things at the moment on top of monitoring incoming stories.
- As for Water World: No Escape, I've looked over their (I, DaCashman's) other stories and they have a tendency to write in that purple prose style and use shock imagery in a gimmicky manner so I'm a bit hesitant to delete that one and just trigger a snowball of deletions all due to someone's style of writing. That being said, the issues that were present in the Jungle Book VHS are also present there so I'll have to give this one some thought and decide whether or not it warrants removal. Thanks for the heads-up. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 01:14, August 25, 2015 (UTC)
New Stand-Alone pasta
Hey, would love some feedback from you on my latest story, Queen Justine and the Cutest Little Shing.
Thanks in advance,
About that story
Is there any chance you could link me to it? I'll riff it when I get back to my dad's house since my computer is there.
No hard feelings
I respect your feelings, though I would like to explain the work a bit deeper. The story itself was never meant as a personal political commentary, as I myself am largely apathetic to most of the noise that comes across the news everyday. The views expressed within the story were simply meant to serve two purposes:
1. To express the views of the characters, who were designed to be of a specific poltiical/social background. In other words, this wasn't me, as the writer, trying to find some sort of soap-box to stand on and make a political statement. If that had been my intention, I would not have chosen Creepypasta Wiki to be said soap-box. There are plenty of political forums all over the internet that I could use to express any such views, and I would never compromise the integrity of this site or its users to make such a statement.
2. To use current events to create a somewhat "smart" pasta that took topical issues and applied them to fiction, much in the way that Law and Order uses current events to craft their episodes. When I was conceiving this story, that was my main idea, to use a form of "meta-fiction" so to speak, to write something fictional, but based loosely from real events.
If the story created a degree of "talking point" then that would be fine, as writing is an art form, and should, to me at least, be a catalyst for conversation.
Had you continued to read the story, you would have seen that the political undertones faded and gave way to the mystery and horror edge. The current events that I loosely referenced, were simply there to form a tangible, real-world feel to the story, while adapting the fictional concepts of a horror story.
As an artist, I won't apologize for my work or for any emotional responses that said work brought on, since that is largely the object of creating art. However, person to person, I do value your input, as you have been a solid supporter of most of my stories, and I certainly have always, and will continue, to seek your input. Your reviews and commentaries on my Tobit series have been a great assistance in my writing, and I certainly would not want to lose that from my wheelhouse. In other words, your opinions matter to me, and I certainly would not want to lose that moving forward. What I am saying is that while I will not apologize for the work, I will express that I never desired to offend anyone, especially someone like you, who I value around here very much.
In closing, I will say this. You should read the rest of the story. If only to see that it was not meant to be a politically charged agenda dressed up as a Creepypasta story. Even if your input is still negative, it would be that much more complete if you actually finished the story. That of course, is your decision. Lastly, I want to ensure you one last time that the intent of this story was never to spew any personal political views, but rather to tell a story that made use of the events going on in the world.
Re: Riff Suggestion
While I am curious about the story (I actually would like to read it; I like bizarre stories), I can't Riff it at the moment. As of present, I'm on a Riff hiatus. Season 2 (yes, I'm dividing them into seasons) will take place around October, maybe November, at latest December.
But, I would like to read it.
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Thanks for a copy of the story! There was one glaring question I had while reading this. How did one replace an oxygen tank with a nitrous oxide tank? I don't think N.O tanks are small enough to fit in an average backpack both height and weight wise. How would they even have access to the tank? Even if they were able to somehow fit the tank in the bag and replace it, it wouldn't be long before they were caught because in the story, the N.O tank is supposed to be similar to the oxygen tank right? That means its the exact same size which I think would draw even more attention to the attention that the person had when they were carrying the N.O.
But what if it were a teacher you ask? I don't recall too many teachers trying to pull a prank like this when I was in public school (currently homeschooled).
Re: The Story
Well, I did a read of the story, and I don't think stupid is the word I'd use to describe it. More like "anticlimatic." Is it a bad story? Not really. You proved you can at least use the English language, which puts you leagues ahead of many stories I've Riffed.
I might Riff the story when I'm off of my hiatus, or might review it for The Dork Report (if you're cool with that).
And yes, I did see your comment on my blog bitching about Gotham.
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Are you the author of the story of the story you sent me? I'm a bit confused.
Wait, you make comics? Might I see them?
And, of course, I'll let you know - and send you a draft of sorts - of whatever I do involving your story.
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I see. Well that clears up a lot of things for me. I'm currently writing a creepypasta right now. It's a lost episode pasta and it will have chapters. If you want to see what I gave so far, tell me and I'll send you a pastebin link.
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OK. Here's what I have so far in the pasta: http://pastebin.com/u0xWQPuq
The parts with the samurai stalking the main character, I'm thinking of a possible twist where the Samurai was a figment of her imagination due to a mental illness.
So I'm Stuck With The Blame
These people have been coming out at night, screaming up a storm and jumping into the pool even when it's four in the morning and raining outside. I tell mysel, "Well, you have your computer going all night, so how you complain! If you call the cops, you'll be in hot water too. So, shut up! Oh, that's right, you're too stupid to understand shut up."
That's what I am thinking and I hate it. Why should I take the fall for somebody running up and down the stairs, shouting like a madman and jumping into the pool at four in the morning?
So I sent you my pasta wanting to know your thoughts on it. I don't know if you had finished reading it yet or if you have started on it. If you're in the middle of reading it, how's it going so far? As for me, I'm really bored.
Reply to "Computer Troubles" message
I don't blame you. My computer is about 7 years old and it's dying. I would get a new one but I don't have the money to replace it right now. I'm up to $103.00 in my savings. I don't think I can get a decent computer for 100 bucks. Maybe if I look on Craigslist I might but I'm not sure. I sold an extra tablet I had lying around on Craigslist and the transaction went fine.
As for the story, I finished chapter 8 and chapter 9 though I'm having someone look at that chapter to see if it's good or not.
I was looking through my dream journal, I noticed some common themes. The setting is in Japan or contains Japanese things, my family doing things together, etc. What could this mean?
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I'm glad you're enjoying what have so far. As of this message, Chapters 8 and 9 are finished. I'm currently working on chapter 10. This may be a long pasta but then again there are some very long pastas on this wiki like 1999 and NES Godzilla. I've heard people say no one will be able to top 1999 in terms of Lost Episode pastas. But I get the feeling that statement is going to be proven wrong when mt pasta is done and uploaded upon the wiki. I'm not guarenteeing it will be perfect but I found 1999 to be rather "meh".
I've been writing chapter outlines before I start a chapter to help me figure out what's going to happen within them. I started this system when I was at the beginning of chapter 7. I gotta say, it's rather helpful. Sometime in Chapter 10, I'm hoping the samurai can appear again this time with a bit more detail. Maybe it can happen after the episode mentions a seance to bring back the samurai girl. As the protagonist watches the episode, the samurai gains detail and strength and eventually, when it's all powered up, it will chase after the protagonist, forcing her to swim in the lake and pass out from exaustion.
I just noticed something...
We are both female and we were both born on the same day! Could this mean we are... TWINS???!!!
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I was born in 1998. I was also born in the morning around 10am but now I'm a full time night owl. The night is a great time to write stories because of the spooky scary mood set by it.
Oh... So the edit lock wasn't just exclusive to the Creepypasta wiki? Huh... That's odd. I was told that they were updating the editing system but it seems to have the exact same layout before the maintenance took place.
I finished chapter 11 and I started working on chapter 12. I only have the first paragraph of 12 done but if you want to read both chapter 11 and the beginning of 12, let me know and I'll send a pastebin link as soon as I can.
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Oh sure. No problem! Here's the link to chapters 8-12: http://pastebin.com/c8t33kRa
Let me know your thoughts when you finish reading the chapters.
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To be honest, there have been a few episodes of The Haunting Hour that harken back to the days of Goosebumps/Are You Afraid Of The Dark? Like Best Friend Forever and My Sister The Witch for example.
Did you hear there's a Goosebumps movie with Jack Black? I've been hearing good things about the movie though it's not out in any of my local theatres. I have seen him do well in dramatic roles such as when he played the title character in Bernie.
I'm adding onto chapter 12. I think one of the things with the legend will be is that if you tell it out loud, bad things will happen, like having an animal break into your home and causing destruction to start and work up from there. It's kind of similar to other Japanese urban legends like Tomino's Hell and Cow Head in a sense that if you tell them out loud, the teller and listener will suffer consequences.
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Is it a HYPER REALISTIC Yorkie? I'm up to the part where the family is going into the dining room. I can't think of a good transition between the part where Kristy and her father are called into the dining room and the part where the dining room is shown.
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Yeah! I've heard of the Yuki story. I believe that one is about a samurai who slits his wife's mouth for I guess cheating on him. Now she goes around wearing a surgical mask asking people if she's pretty. If the person says yes, she will rip the mask off and reveal her scar and asking the person if she's still beautiful. If they still say yes, she will slit their mouths to be like hers. If the person says no to her question of being pretty, she will kill them.
You can outsmart her by answering "You're so so" or something like that. You can even throw candy at her. Don't know if she likes Snickers though. I always get the damn nuts stuck in my throat and nearly choke on em.
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If the ad you're talking about was made in Japan, I wouldn't be too surprised. I mean they could have an ad for something as mundane as carrots and make it super epicly bizzare. But God Damnit! That's what I love about them.
I've read a lot of Japanese urban legends and some might get mixed with others at times. I have heard at least 30 I think. Did you know that one of their legends involves a giant spooky scary skeleton?
I finished Chapter 12 of my pasta. I'm not able to send you a pastebin link right now since I'm not on my tablet, but I will do so as soon as possible.
Got the Link!
I got a pastebin link with chapter 12 when you get a chance to read it.
So after I finish my R.L Stine pasta, I might start a horror anthology series called "Scary Stories from Silver Creek".
Here's a sample story I wrote for the series when participating in a writer's workshop activity at one of my state libraries. I had to write a story based on a one sentence prompt. My prompt was "The scary child turned her head and stared at me." Here's what I came up with:
Too Many Eyes (Best title I could think of at that time)
Alex always had trouble making eye contact and this day way no exception. He was on a school trip at the Winthrope Mansion, which had artwork from all around the world. They all had one thing in common though. Their eyes would seemingly follow Alex everywhere he went. For a majority of the mansion tour, he found himself shaking and breathing heavily. He also kept his head down except when the tour guide had something to say.
The next thing Alex knew, he got himself separated from the group and found himself in this echoy gallery with a bunch of statues. His eyes darted around the room and his breathing became faster and heavier. Suddenly, Alex heard a loud crunching noise. When he turned around, he saw a statue of a little girl staring at him with big eyes and her neck turned at an impossible position. Alex then heard a loud thump and everything went black.
Editing Lock... Again!
So today, editing on the wiki was locked for a bit of time and the other weird part about it was all the icons were reverted back to the generic grey and black avatar. Did you happen to notice this too? Was this all an event in my head? Let's hope we find out.
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What I just sent you was the whole story. I always assumed echoy was a word for some reason. I don't know, maybe it's because the English language can be confusing at times, which is saying a lot considering that I'm a native speaker. Well, since echoing is a word, I'll use it.
At first, I thought the wiki got hacked again. But then I found out that wasn't the case. Instead, it was just some regular maintenance of the site.
So from what I've been told, Chapter 12 of my pasta has a good description of more of Kristy's house, such as rooms like the dining room and kitchen, and the lacing was great. Chapter 13 might start with the main protagonist noticing that the sun is setting and her starting to close all the blinds and windows in her room because of her fear of having someone look into her window at night. That happens to be one of my own personal fears. I don't know if its a good start and if you want to suggest something else, go ahead and do so.
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The story of how you got you dictionary is like a creepypasta.
I went to a library book sale. I came across this book called "NixDic.book" which was a dictonary that was written back when Nixon was the Murcian president.
I went home and read it but when I got to the Z section, all the Z words were replaced by the number 333. This lead me to one logical conclusion. It was Satan's half ass brother expressing his frustrations of the fact that Sunky.mpg 3: The Quest for The Squishy would never be a thing!
Greatest... Trollpasta... Ever!
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There are people I know who do use words like "Murica" or "Murican" in place of "American" or "America". I didn't get your message earlier because my internet at my dad's house was out for a bit. But it's fixed now so that's good. Turns out the router was crapped out because it was 10 years old. We had a very gracious ceremony for it... We threw it in the garbage can.
I'm currently working on the chapter 13 outline and I don't know if the samurai should appear in this chapter or not. I might imply that the samurai gets stronger as night approches.
Beginning of Chapter 13
"After that scene played out, I noticed that my room became dimmer. I turned around to see that the sun was starting to set as it turned my room orange. While this seemed beautiful to look at, it made my head throb and I quickly shut the blinds."
After the part where the protagonist shuts the blinds, I want her to explain that she's afraid of people looking through her window at night even though she's on the second floor. How would I word that while showing it through words?
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Here are two possibilities based on your description:
"That's not the only reason I closed the blinds and windows. You see, when I was about 9 or 10 years old, my mom would tell me to close my windows and blinds at night so that way, people would be less inclined to look into my window or break in or something like that. Ever since then, I have NEVER left my windows and blinds open at night. Even during sunset, I still closed them anyway."
"That's not the only reason why I closed the windows and blinds. When I was around 7 years old, I stayed up and watched horror movies with my brother. The movie we were watching was one of the Halloween movies. I was only a bit scared but my brother was the only person who kept me from out right panicking. However, there was one scene that I just couldn't handle. It was a scene where Micheal Myers was looking into a window of another character's house. Maybe it was because I was sitting next to a window that had the blinds open but all I remember after that was breathing rapidly and shaking. I also cried a bit as I hugged my brother."
If there's anything I can add or take away, let me know.
I don't know how consistently you put out stories as I just got around to reading some of your pasta, but I was wondering if you were working on any new stories. I've still got quite a few to read through before I've read them all, but I'll probably get through them by the end of the month. I really like your style, you tend to leave things open ended and they are thought provoking, lots of room for interpretation. There's a story that I read that I didn't feel like it worked out, The Watch on the Arm, it felt boring as to how nothing really seemed to happen and that the characters sort of leaped to conclusions, at least in my book. I guess it's more of a tale about how someone is going to try and turn their life around, but it didn't strike me as spooky or thought provoking, just an ordinary everyday type of occurance with a superstition added to it. Just my opinion though, I didn't want to leave a negative review on your story's page so I thought I'd bring it up here.
Overall, your stories have been a delight for me to read, especially Reminder of Death and Just Tell Yourself. I'm probably going to check out The Beast of Genov and The Man Called Pathos tonight. Buckle up I'm going to be popular 21:29, November 16, 2015 (UTC)
- That's awesome! I read The Melon Head Illustration a couple of days ago, so it'll be interesting to go back through it and see the alternate endings. I've always had a real soft spot for the Choose Your Own Adventure genre, it's always exciting to see how things play out differently. You seem to write very regularly, I'm jealous, I usually only get something put out once a month. I'm working on two pasta at the moment, one's a sequel and is about aliens, the Men In Black, and Stonehenge. The other is a complete free write that I'm doing with a friend. I take a turn writing a bit then she takes a turn, etc. We're going to try to get it posted on here, we'll have to go back and edit out some inconsistencies and stuff beforehand though.
- Say, do you like anime? There's an anime, Fate Zero, that spawns three alternate series that all starts the same but splits off. They're all pretty awesome.
- I don't know if you should change The Watch on the Arm because it was just my opinion on the matter and it speaks a lot of George's character to be that superstitious about it. It's like a sign of him needing something to believe in to turn his life around, if you have his health take a bit of a dive in the story then that may be lost/changed. I'm probably not making much sense XD but I think it's an idea you should hold onto and consider implementing only if you get more criticisms toward the story because that was just my opinion on it.
- Thank you, are you going for THE YEAR OF ALL THE WIKI badge as well? I just want to get the rarest badge :P Also, congrats on 1600 edits! Buckle up I'm going to be popular 18:22, November 17, 2015 (UTC)
- I hope so, my friend strikes me as a better writer than I am and it's her first Creepypasta (I usually hate colabs, but I've had a lot of fun writing with her and it seems to be boosting her confidence like I want). Unfortunately, her computer died so I'm waiting on it to get fixed so that we can continue the story.
- Haha, I know that feeling. "Did you even read my story?!" That's super annoying and gets old quick. If I ever mess up that bad, then it's because I would have read the story super late and was super tired, however, I haven't messed up in that way yet.
- I admittedly couldn't get into Naruto (or Bleach, when a person likes one they seem to like the other). Fate Zero is fighting based and has to do with mages that fight in a war for the Holy Grail by summoning servants/heroic spirits from different eras to fight on their behalf. The first episode is 40 minutes long and all exposition, so that might be a bit of a turn off, but if you can bear with it then you'll probably love the show.
Problems With Archiving
It just stays on 'History' when I hit the edit button on my Talk Page>