aka The Outsider



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Tyberzannisultra (talk) 21:25, December 31, 2014 (UTC)


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LOLSKELETONS (talk) 04:51, October 12, 2013 (UTC)

Little Talk story


Read the story you posted up on my talk page, I like! I'll be reading it a few more times over, maybe making edits to some parts if they need it but don't worry, I won't tell anybody about the end :)

Overall really good! Definitely think you should post it up

Disco Circus (talk) 05:37, September 24, 2014 (UTC)

Thank you very much for taking the time to read it! I'm looking foward to seeing your rendition of it, although I hope you will keep the dialogue the same, because those parts are based off the original song ;)

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 06:09, September 24, 2014 (UTC)Tyberzannisultra

Hahaha I'll try to keep as faithful as I can, nothing too big

Disco Circus (talk) 05:24, September 25, 2014 (UTC)

Good, I'm excited to see you edit!

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 20:36, September 25, 2014 (UTC)

Started keeping track of the edits and writing them down piece by piece. Got a post on my user blog with the ones I've made so far if you wanna see that

Disco Circus (talk) 07:24, September 26, 2014 (UTC)

Looking good so far! Thanks for the help! I'll check back again later, no rush :)

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 07:47, September 26, 2014 (UTC)

New Story

I just received your new message about your troll pasta story about centipedes so I'm going to check it out.--User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 17:47, September 29, 2014 (UTC)

I have a new story in progress that's called Far Liath Weather, although I might change the title as soon as I finish the work. If you have the time, you can review this and let me know what needs more work. I really appreciate it. Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 19:06, September 30, 2014 (UTC)

I just submitted a entry into Chilling Tales for Dark Nights 's October 2014 Flash Fiction Horror Writing Contest

It's called "Historic Points of Interest--Ferrisville"

If you're interested, you can vote on it

I'm also working on an updated version of this story>

--User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 18:11, November 3, 2014 (UTC)

New Story2

Hi there, Tyber. I have a sequel story featured on the Writer's Workshop Forum that could be described as a novella. It is a sequel to Doorway to Darkness. If you have the time, you can take a look and advice on what needs to be improved.

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 03:57, January 14, 2015 (UTC)

Okay, I shall read and review both of them. However, it may take more than a day to finish the second, longer story.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:56, January 14, 2015 (UTC)

A New Question

I have a rather important question on this particular blog that needs an urgent answer. It's not really a Matter of Life or Death question. >

A Creepypasta Question About Elves And What To Name Them User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 02:13, October 12, 2014 (UTC)

A New Question2

I'm going to send this message once again since I'm not sure if it made it through to your talk page yesterday. It said it did, but I didn't see it.

I was wondering if you have any narrator experience or do you know any one here who has enough time to narrate some fairly long pastas? I tried asking other narrators featured on YouTube, but they either don't reply to my message or they say they would, but then don't have enough time.

Below are the two stories I'm trying to find narrators for>

The Silent Audience--A Historical Note

The Basement of Doom

--User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 17:36, December 22, 2014 (UTC)

Yeah, I got your message. It was placed within another message. No problem, though. I've actually been reading Basement of Doom, but I stopped at chapter 13 because it was getting late. I'll read the rest of it and The Silent Audience tonight. I've also taken the liberty of rounding up some narrators from YouTube.

To start with, we have the Industry's Juggernauts, but I'm sure you'd like Basement of Doom to be narrated by a female, so here's twoothers. Also, I know this guy named James Jones. He narrated Sun's Revenge, and I'm sure he'd be more then happy to narrate your stories, no matter the length. However, he might want to do Basement of Doom in the Second Person so that it makes more sense.

If you want, I can contact all of these people and persuade them to help you out. I can also have James do a narration as well.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:51, December 22, 2014 (UTC)

Yes, I would like that very much. Thank you. Would it also be okay if the illustrations I did for these two stories are also incorporated into the narrations or would that be too much?--User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 23:29, December 27, 2014 (UTC)

It’s no problem at all. And yes, I’ll include the illustrations in my narration. I don’t know what the other YouTubers will want to do, though. Unfortunately I cannot provide a deadline for you as to when I’ll have this done. Holiday season; you know how it is. Happy New Year, by the way!

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 22:11, December 31, 2014 (UTC)

Happy New Year and Thank You

Happy New Year to you too! Thank you so much for the help for getting these stories some much needed attention. I don't mid waiting, it's a really arduous task getting even one story narrated. Noticed your new User icon. Really cool! --User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 03:06, January 1, 2015 (UTC)

Review Request

Hey I was wondering if you could review my story in the writers workshop forum, it's called "The Art of Death". I would appreciate if, in your spare time, you could read over it though please keep in mind that it's only about half done.

Listing to and fro

Well, we all knew that the thread would be closed eventually, but it was sure fun while it lasted. I thank you for your compliment (and yes, I do know how cranky Nooth can get). Here are the countdown moments I said I'd find for you.

AFI’s 100 Years… 100 Songs (American Film Institute, 2004)

  • 46. “Don’t Rain on My Parade” from Funny Girl
  • 16. “Evergreen” from the 1970s version of A Star Is Born
  • 13. “People” from Funny Girl (In the special Barbara said at first she thought, “Shouldn’t the happiest people in the world be the ones who don’t need people?” but then she realized what the message of the song was and agreed)
  • 8. “The Way We Were” from The Way We Were (This is a sad song, but it was used in a funny scene in The Naked Gun 2 ½: The Smell of Fear)

AFI’s 100 Years… 100 Movie Quotes (American Film Institute, 2005)

  • 81. “Hello, gorgeous” from Funny Girl (James Brolin said that she did say this to him once, but it didn’t sound right)

200 Greatest Pop Culture Icons

  • 66. Barbara Streisand (Some entries on the list were disappointing, but I agree that Barbara should be included)

100 Greatest Women of Rock & Roll (Vh1, 1999)

  • 31. Barbara Streisand (Recently Vh1 had a new “Greatest Women” countdown, but it turned out that it was just women from the past twenty-five years or so. From the little I saw it was disappointing)

100 Greatest Love Songs (Vh1, I think it was either 2003 or 2004)

  • 22. “You Don’t Bring Me Flowers” by Neil Diamond and Barbara Streisand (According to the segment, they originally recorded two solo versions. A DJ somewhere started playing the solo versions together, and the manufactured duet proved so popular that the record company realized they needed to have them record a real duet)

100 Most Unexpected TV Moments (TV Guide and TV Land, sometime in the 2000s)

  • 20. Barbra Streisand crashes “Coffee Talk” on Saturday Night Live

100 Moments That Rocked TV (Vh1 and TV Guide, 2003)

  • 84. My Name is Barbra, the special that introduced a lot of TV viewers to the singer. (Wait, have we been spelling it wrong this whole time!? I don't know what's what anymore!)

25 Greatest Rock Star Cameos (Vh1, sometime in the 2000s)

  • 1. Barbra Streisand crashes “Coffee Talk” on Saturday Night Live

100 Greatest Artists of Rock & Roll (Vh1, 1998)

  • 34. Buddy Holly (Just a few years ago Vh1 came out with a 100 Greatest Artists list. I haven’t seen the whole thing, but since there are a lot of contemporary artists I fear that the list won’t focus as much on pioneers. I’ll have to see if I can find a copy of the new list)

100 Greatest Rock & Roll Moments on TV (Vh1, pre-2003)

  • 70. In his last television appearance, Buddy Holly performs “Peggy Sue” on American Bandstand (They didn’t have the actual footage, so they showed different footage and talked about Buddy Holly and The Crickets appearing on the show. I forget if it were that same episode, but Dick Clark said that on one episode Buddy confided that he hated to fly. If this were on that episode, then how creepy is that?)

100 Greatest Videos (Vh1, 2001)

  • 27. “Buddy Holly” by Weezer (I know it’s the song title and not the artist, but I’m including it anyway)

Also, "Superstition" was on a couple lists circa 2000-2001. It was number seventeen on the 100 Greatest Pop Songs list (MTV and Rolling Stone) and number twenty-two on the 100 Greatest Rock Songs list (Vh1). That was back when both channels still cared. ~signs and reminisces~ Raidra (talk) 04:27, November 8, 2014 (UTC)

Ahh, you have come through for me! With this information, we shall rule the world!

When she says "Hello gorgeous" it comes out "Hellow gworgeous"

And yes, it is Barbra. We've been doing it wrong.

That is creepy!

Superstition on a Pop list? That can't be right...

So tell me, dear Raidra, did you have all this committee to memory? Did you have to look any of this up or did you already have it on file? I appreciate the time you've taken to compile this for me and present it oh, so neatly. These days it seems as though everyone takes amusement in utterly annihilating my talk page.

I used to watch Vh1 when I was just a wee thing. Thanks for bringing back some memories : )

☢Tyberius Zann☢ Tyberzannisultra (talk) 08:31, November 8, 2014 (UTC)

You're certainly welcome! I'm happy to do it for someone who appreciates it! I looked them up in print-outs and books I had, but interestingly enough, I did have several of these lists completely or partially memorized at one time. Ah, the days when Vh1 was good. Memmmoriesss... light the corners of my minddd...

I think the scanner washed it out a little, but here's a drawing of Van and Genie.

Van and other characters

As you can see, Van was feeling a little cranky in this drawing. Genie's alias is "Chemist" and Van's is "Subject" (on account of him being subject to health problems due to his drug addiction and now being a test subject for an experimental medicine), but Genie and The White Tigress (the heroine who interacts with Genie and Van) refuse to call him that because they have respect for people. If you want to be Van's friend, you don't call him Subject. I also posted three other characters, Sackcloth (the fair maiden with the sleeping gas gun and the ash gun) and her two assistants, Outfitter and Outsider. Raidra (talk) 14:53, November 14, 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for bringing this all up for me to see. I remember falling asleep in front of the TV to Vh1's countdowns. Those really were the days. I found a few of my favorite songs on that channel!

I like these drawings! The scanner seems to be working fine; as they appear to be of high quality. You have a nifty style, it reminds me of Egyptian hieroglyphics, (everything is profile, the eyes are quite large and the feet are long, characters are depicted as almost canine in nature). Very nice, very unique. I believe I have another artist to compete with now ;) 

I think Outsider is my favorite.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:21, November 16, 2014 (UTC)

~laughs~ I don't know about competition, but I'm glad you liked them!  I appreciate the compliments about my style.

I actually have a scene in mind for when I do the issue introducing Outsider.  Sackcloth, the vigilante Outsider assists, is really a wealthy woman.  I plan to have a scene in which Outfitter and Outsider are outside a fancy club or restaurant that they were barred from earlier.  The snooty guy at the door still won't let them in, but then he discovers who they're friends with and he falls over himself welcoming them in.  Who doesn't love A) an underdog finally getting recognition and B) a snooty guy having to humble himself (other than the snooty guy)? 

I'm writing a guide for my heroes and villains.  Here are the entries for Outsider, Outfitter, and Sackcloth (In case you're wondering why I didn't post entries for Genie and Van, it's because I haven't finished them yet).

Outfitter and Outsider

Secret identities- Outfitter: Carter Reeves. Outsider: Jared Martin

Birthplaces- Outfitter: California. Outsider: Pennsylvania

Occupations- Outfitter: army surplus store clerk. Outsider: clothing store clerk

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- combat skill, marksmanship, ninja stars

Status- minor allies, members of Shophetim

First appearances- Shophetim#16

Personalities- Outfitter and Outsider have caring, helpful, and brave personalities. They both felt a connection to Ramona Rue, going on to become her close friends and assistants in her Sackcloth activities. Outfitter is more serious, but he isn’t stern. Outsider is more mellow and casual, but he has definite senses of duty and honor.

Appearance- Outfitter and Outsider are male Caucasian humans. Outfitter has light brown hair with three tufts and Outsider has blond hair with three tufts. Outfitter often wears a turquoise shirt, gray pants, black boots, and a reddish-brown belt with a gold buckle. Outsider often wears a light gray shirt with a white skull in an orange flame, light brown pants, short white boots, dark red fingerless gloves, a black leather belt with silver studs, and a silver cross necklace. They both wear gray backpacks while crime-fighting.

Entry- When Ramona Rue, on her way to becoming the vigilante Sackcloth, entered the army surplus/camping supplies store in which Carter Reeves worked, he felt a connection to her. After selling her gloves, boots, and a protective mask, he suggested that she go to the store where his friend Jared worked. Jared felt the same connection to her and sold her the rest of the supplies she needed. The two friends saw Sackcloth in action and realized that she was the same woman. Later on, they helped Sackcloth and The White Tigress stop the crook who had attacked Sackcloth. Moved by how caring the young men were, Sackcloth invited them to fight crime by her side. They gladly accepted, Carter taking the codename “Outfitter” and Jared going by “Outsider”. They now assist Sackcloth in her battle against injustice.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Both Outfitter and Outsider are good fighters and can hit a target with accuracy. They are armed with ninja stars which can be used to injure or distract an opponent.

Weaknesses- Outfitter and Outsider are susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).

Trivia- Outsider’s name comes from the genre outsider music, which is unconventional music performed by social outsiders or by musicians who live and work in seclusion. Outfitter’s workplace was inspired by a (now-closed) Dayton store called G.S. Outfitters. When trying to name the character I found the word, thought of the store, and realized the name was right there all along.


Secret identity- Ramona Rue

Birthplace- Pennsylvania

Occupation- heiress/designer

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- gas gun, ash gun, combat skill, stealth, intelligence

Status- vigilante, member of Shophetim

First appearance- Shophetim#16 (Ramona first appeared in WT#77)

Personality- Sackcloth is bright, confident, dignified, and strong-willed. When inspiration hits her she’ll start drawing designs anywhere, even at a business luncheon or dinner with friends, but she is far from self-absorbed and continues to engage in conversation. She is proud, but is also unpretentious and doesn’t hesitate to lower herself to help others. At one point she started to succumb to temptation and entered into an unscrupulous business deal. However, her better nature came out when she found out what kind of person she was dealing with and tried to end her dealings with him. When tortured by the criminal, she refused to give into him and only became more determined to stop him. She became a vigilante to stop him and continued because she wanted to help others. She doesn’t care about whether people know her secret identity or not. She is very good friends with Tad Thomas and Tabitha Thomas, better known as The White Tigress, and is very close to her sidekicks, Outfitter and Outsider, who helped her in her time of need.

Appearance- Sackcloth is a female Caucasian human with long, thick, red hair. Her costume consists of a black shirt, skirt, boots, and protective mask, a brown sackcloth poncho, a silver belt, and white gloves. She also coats her neck with ashes.

Entry- Ramona Rue is a wealthy and intelligent designer (clothing accessories, furniture, toys, etc.) who lives in a city not far from Karasburg. She got involved with a businessman who turned out to be a sadistic criminal. When she tried to end her dealings with him, he had his men torture her. When she refused to give into him, he drugged her, told her to stop him if she could, and abandoned her in a ditch. Determined to stop him (and not knowing her friend Tabitha Thomas was really The White Tigress), she decided to form her own crime-fighting identity. Getting materials from the men later dubbed “Outfitter” and “Outsider”, she made herself weapons and a costume. The White Tigress, investigating Ramona’s disappearance, found her and, along with Outfitter and Outsider, stopped the evil businessman. Wanting to help others who were suffering at the hands of criminals, she decided to continue being a vigilante. She now fights for justice with the help of Outfitter and Outsider.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Sackcloth is very smart with a good degree of stealth. She is a good fighter and is armed with two special guns. One shoots ashes (to distract an opponent) and the other shoots knock-out gas (to knock-out an opponent).

Weaknesses- Sackcloth is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.). Her mask protects her against poison gas, so she can only be gassed if she’s not wearing her mask.

Trivia- Sackcloth was inspired by multiple sources. The mask came from, of all things, an episode of the cartoon Camp Lazlo. The idea of a penitent heroine came from Biblical passages about people repenting in sackcloth and ashes. I also decided it would be a riveting story to have a mysterious, penitent character who turned out to be a familiar figure. Those factors combined to form Sackcloth. Sackcloth’s gas gun makes sense because of her mask, but it’s also reminiscent of various Golden Age vigilantes, such as the original version of Sandman from DC Comics. Also, there really are guns that can fire a spray of mace. In keeping with the penitence theme, her last name is a word meaning “regret”, “sorrow”, or “remorse”. Raidra (talk) 14:36, November 17, 2014 (UTC)

This is all very awesome. You mention a seventy-seventh issue of a comic series, which means you have over 77 comics?! That's amazing! I've only managed to make a dozen comics in my time. You're very productive and thorough with your descriptions and backstory of each character. All too often characters are deprived of a good backstory, and that makes them Two-Dimensional. A part of me really wants to read all of these comics! I'll bet I could get lost in your world.

I've got a few characters of my own that I include in my comics. I've got myself, and then I have my Alter-Ego. His name is Original Man, and his purpose is to make fun of my inability to be original. In each of his comics he comes up with crazy "get rich quick" schemes. At the end of each comic, he gives the scheme a name that is slightly different from an existing, copyright name, and then he says "Stay creative, my friends." I should show you him sometime, if you are so inclined. I draw in Anime style, but when I draw myself and my family/friends, I draw their Minecraft characters (blocky heads and everything).

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 22:20, November 17, 2014 (UTC)

Thanks!  I do have more than 77 altogether, but I haven't actually reached WT#77 yet.  I have the list of issues I'd like to do and very short descriptions of what I'd like to do in this or that issue (introduce this character, feature that villain, etc.).  I have a basic idea and then I make it up as I go long, which sometimes inspires creativity and other times sorta drives it into the rocks, but it's all good.  I've been making comic books since I was 13 (1996).  They started out being ten pages long, then became twelve pages long, and now I'm thinking about doing a "random page number" format (Random page number format, folks!  Go crazy!).  My output isn't as productive as it used to be, but if I'm happy with my work, it doesn't really matter.  Characters include humans, human-animal hybrids, talking animals, aliens, and other creatures.  It's interesting because on one hand I've done issues on some very serious topics (I had an issue in which a character revealed that he was a recovering heroin addict) and then on the other hand there are some outright bizarre and silly things in my comics (I have one character who's a superpowered Teletubby - yes, you read that right - and another character named "Better Days Aside" after a mondegreen, or misheard lyric, of the song "Bette Davis Eyes").  For the most part, though, they're semi-serious, staying lighthearted and even humorous.  I did a two-page comic for a project in 12th grade, and I concluded it by saying the crook had been arrested "while trying to rob The Bulge, an all-you-can-eat buffet/weight-loss clinic."  My friend Nick (who I gave the issue to after it was graded) replied, "Kind of tongue-in-cheek there, aren't you?"

It's funny how Original Man pretty such is subtly (or is it blatantly?) ripping off things.  I would like to see that.  Thanks for the compliments and laughs in the blogs!  I appreciate them all. :-D Raidra (talk) 14:36, November 19, 2014 (UTC)

What I do is I write down the punchline of whatever joke I'm trying to convey, then build the comic around it. Sometimes when I get into hassles with people, I make Rageface comics about them afterward. In my notes I'll write "Make the Curse You >insert name here< comic" and then make it later. In my notes I have to make a comic about someone named Emily. However, I cannot, for the life of me, remember who this "Emily" is or how she offended me!

I love all of the puns you've got here. I lol'ed pretty hard at "All you can eat buffet/ weight loss clinic". Leave it to the corporations of today to construct such a round-about facility as that. If my indie-game ever makes it public, can I please have that building somewhere in the game? It's too sweet to pass up!

I somewhat agree with Nick. Your stories seem pretty serious to me, from what you've told me, although the comic you showed me was quite the opposite.

Original Man? Oh, he steals just about everything. I took the liberty of restoring his first two comics and presenting them here:


--A Question About Narrators==

Do you know anyone who happens to be a narrator of Creepypasta stories? I'm trying to find someone willing to narrate my story>


]The Basement of Doom] --User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 05:59, December 22, 2014 (UTC)

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:17, November 20, 2014 (UTC)

~laughs~ I thought the "cow-flipping" one was funny.  I also thought it was funny how he does random bizarre things before enacting his scams.  At first I thought the window-licking was part of a scam (like he'd lick the window and then demand payment for "cleaning" it), but no, apparently this is something he does for jollies!  In any case, thanks for posting!

Sure, you can have your own The Bulge franchise in your works!  Feel free to have as many as you want.  Just let me see the design when you do, and give me credit if anyone asks. Raidra (talk) 14:55, November 21, 2014 (UTC)

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! You see, every comic begins with "You can find him >insert ridiculous activity here< and >insert scam here< and then >insert profit here<." Then he gives the scam a name and, viola, Stay Creative My Friends! The thing is, the first panel in every comic alludes to the events in the previous comic. In one episode, our anti-hero steals tires from a sleeping man, and in the next comic you can see his Oldsmobile is equipped with balloon tires xD

I was originally planning on putting The Bulge in my stealth game, but I'm starting a new Racing game and I will need a lot of buildings to put around. If I really go through with this, you can expect full credit and a range of samples so you can see it for yourself. As a bonus, if the game goes commercial, you can play for free!

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 21:02, November 22, 2014 (UTC)


Raidra (talk) 14:28, November 24, 2014 (UTC)

Costume Contest

The page is up and ready to be viewed! Thanks for contributing and making the contest successful. Have a good one.

EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:55, November 9, 2014 (UTC)

Thanks, bud. Third place? Not bad, eh?

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:57, November 9, 2014 (UTC)

Re: Abuse Report

This is something that occurred offsite, so I'm afraid there's nothing I can do about it. Sorry. If they start harassing you on this site, let me know and I'll deal with it.

LOLSKELETONS (talk) 21:37, November 24, 2014 (UTC)

While not the most ideal response, I have to agree with Skel. However there are methods on chat where you can make it so messages sent on chat by certain users are not viewable. If you frequent chat, I'd advise asking a moderator to show you how to block chat messages for threatening users. Sorry, wish I could be more help. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:48, November 24, 2014 (UTC)
You guys are really fast. I requested help because I'm certain that after a few days, the user will realize he's been blocked, and begin spamming my talk page. I'll ignore him. If he persists, I'll tell him I quit working with him. If he goes farther, I'll notify you. I want as little contact with him as possible. Thank you for coming to my aid.
I have not participated in the Chat as of yet, but if I do, I will seek out the moderators.
Tyberzannisultra (talk) 22:57, November 24, 2014 (UTC)
If he begins spamming your talk, let one of us know and we will deal with it ASAP. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:59, November 24, 2014 (UTC)
One question: if he leaves just a single message, is that considered Spam?
Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:03, November 24, 2014 (UTC)
I would say no, but if the content makes you feel threatened/uncomfortable. Don't hesitate to let one of us know. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:06, November 24, 2014 (UTC)
    Thank you, kindly
    Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:13, November 24, 2014 (UTC)

Request Advice On a Recent Story

l was told in the Rough Draft titled (The Revenants) that I was putting too much explanation into characters and appearances, and that less is more. I'm still debating if I should trim it more, especially the description of this disagreeable character named Chelsea. I'm afraid if I trim more off then she'll turn into a one-dimensional prop character.

If you have the time, I would really appreciate some much needed feedback on this.


Permission Request

May I use the picture of your Costume Contest Submission Praecognitus (I believe it's called TybersEntry.jpg) for an upcoming blog?  It's just for comparison to a picture I'll be posting of myself wearing a mask I made.  I wanted to ask you first to make sure it was okay.  Raidra (talk) 02:14, December 4, 2014 (UTC)

I give you full permission to use my picture for this blog. When you do post it, please let me know so I can come read and comment on it : )

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 02:21, December 4, 2014 (UTC)

Thanks!  Here it is! Raidra (talk) 17:10, December 4, 2014 (UTC)

In case you haven't visited the blog already, the new pictures are up. Raidra (talk) 14:45, December 6, 2014 (UTC)

Umbra Story

My Umbra story is one of twelve at November 2014 Holiday Horror Writing Contest> [1]

If you would like to vote for it or another story, you have to email them directly at

Due to bug issues, the voting button on their site doesn't work.--User: Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 01:15, December 19, 2014 (UTC)

Van and Genie Profiles

Here are the entries for Genie and Van (most of them, anyway). They're technically classified as villains, but that's only because they're working for a criminal. I personally look at them as good people (even Van, whose made mistakes in his life), and they have a good relationship with the heroine of the book, The White Tigress.  In any case, this should shed more light on the characters.


Secret identity- Genie Paige

Birthplace- New Jersey

Occupation- chemist/errand girl

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- chemical genius, utility belt, intelligence

Status- villainess

First appearance- WT#49

Personality- Chemist has a humble and quiet, yet strong and resolute personality. She has a dry sense of humor and keeps calm even in tense situations. For example, when Van Rivera, in the midst of a drug-related fit, threatened to kill her for not providing an antidote, she merely replied, “I can understand why you’d feel that way.” Chemist became aware at a young age that while chemistry can help people (by being used to create medicines) it can also be used to hurt people (by being used to create poisons). Finding out about gas warfare during World War I and other deadly chemical weapon attacks led her to become a pacifist, and she swore to use her chemical genius only for good. She only uses non-lethal chemical weapons, she always uses the least amount of force necessary to incapacitate an opponent, and she tries to cause as little harm as possible. Her philosophy, as she explained to Van, is that if you beat someone, you should beat them with a shoelace. Her compassion extends to not wanting to see others harm themselves. She responded to Van injecting himself by noting that it was creepy to see someone shoot up, and she has shown concern about him obsessing over his glory days. Though she doesn’t like people to suffer, she makes use of aversion therapy to help people overcome their drug addictions and obtain sobriety. This is because she believes it’s better to endure some suffering now in order to be well and happy in the future. Her altruism, honesty, and thoroughness make her very trustworthy. She is good at persuading people, but she only persuades people to do things for their own good. She is a Christian who greatly respects Jewish culture and philosophy, especially the Talmud. In fact, her “shoelace philosophy” is related to a Talmudic passage calling on parents to remember to have mercy when disciplining children. She is proud of her British-American heritage and shows it by using British pronunciations, spellings, and slang terms. She also has knowledge about Italian culture, and she & Van sometimes communicate in Italian. She is close to Van and is quite fond of him. For instance, she made him a transparent protective mask, saying it would be a shame to cover such a handsome face. Though she is his boss, nurse, and “principal” (the person protected by a bodyguard), they have an informal relationship. She may refer to him as “Subject”, “Initial Subject”, or “Subject Rivera” in the notes for her clinical trials, she does not use the nickname “Subject”, instead calling him by his first name or a pet name. She sometimes calls him “Giovenco” (Italian for “Bullock”) or “Mi Tesoro” (an Italian phrase literally meaning “My Treasure” and figuratively meaning “My Darling” or “My Lamb”). Because of her interest in Van’s well-being she doesn’t like Van seeing other healthcare workers, believing that they can’t help him as well as she can. She is a teetotaler and is falling into Van’s habit of sleeping in late.

Appearance- Chemist is a female Caucasian human of English-American heritage. She has bronze hair worn in a long braid held with a ponytail holder the same color as her top. She wears a white lab coat, a light blue violet shirt, a light green skirt, a light brown utility belt, beige rubber gloves, and light brown boots.

Entry- Genie Paige was an English-American woman from New Jersey. After arriving in Karasburg, she and her bodyguard, the disgraced athlete known as Subject, approached Lou Ripken asking for work. Genie explained that she was a whiz at chemistry. She called herself “Chemist”, meaning both an expert in chemistry and a British druggist. She could help with chemical weapons as well as make medicines. When Ripken asked her if she knew The Chemical Man, she replied that she didn’t, but would be glad to serve as a go-between. Ripken saw her potential and hired her and Subject. Chemist’s chemical weapons can be bothersome, but she is generally compassionate towards others and tries to avoid trouble. She will only attack in self-defense, and she never makes any lethal weapons. She will even assist opponents on occasion. The White Tigress has some respect for her and has let her know that if she makes too much trouble, she will have to arrest her.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Chemist is an intelligent chemical genius and wears a belt containing various weapons and other items.

Weaknesses- Chemist is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


Secret identity- Van Rivera

Birthplace- California

Occupation- bodyguard/test subject

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- combat skill, strength, speed, weapons pouch, intelligence, endurance

Status- villain

First appearance- WT#49

Personality- Van is quiet, but has attitude and spirit. On one hand he can be cocky, irritable, and prone to mood swings. On the other he has a shy and reserved side that most people aren’t aware of. His drug use drove his personality to extremes, causing fits of rage at times and almost catatonic states at others. Chemist noted, “There are still times when he’s a hot-headed, arrogant jerk, but he’s like a lamb now that he’s off the drugs. It’s remarkable.” Van has some character flaws, but he also has a definite set of morals, defending the underdog, standing for the truth, and calling out liars. Despite the missteps in his past, Chemist described him as being strong and very intelligent with integrity. While he has been guilty of self-serving behavior, he has also acted altruistically, and he takes time for his fans. It is evident that he longs for the glory days of his playing career as he spends a significant amount of time watching videotapes of his old games (or occasionally DVD collections showing highlights of the championship teams he was on). It has been noted that when he watches his tapes and DVDs, or watches current baseball games on TV, he stares like a man in a trance as he reflects on his past and present. He has been known to nod off during monotonous tasks, but he’s generally a workhorse. He has an aversion to alcohol and is fond of sleeping in late. He generally doesn’t like to eat food, something Chemist has accommodated by making multivitamin pills for him. Van doesn’t like the nickname “Subject” and appreciates Lou Ripken and The White Tigress for not using it. Van was close to his late parents and feels some guilt over past choices he’s made. He seems to have difficulty with relationships. His closest relationship is with his daughter Vanessa, whom he views as a life-saver. He is also close to Chemist, and the two have a casual relationship. Chemist’s resoluteness and compassion cause him to heed her even when he’s reluctant to heed others. He is close friends with Foam, who has a similar personality.

Appearance- Subject is an attractive male Caucasian human of Italian heritage. His wavy, dark brown hair has three tufts and falls halfway down his neck. He is tall and has a healthy, athletic build as opposed to the past when he was unnaturally muscular. As a result of his elbow injury and subsequent Tommy John surgery, he has a long, curving scar around his right elbow pit. He wears a white short-sleeved shirt, green shorts, a reddish brown belt with attached weapons pouch, black fingerless gloves with silver studs over the first knuckles, white socks, and black sneakers. He also wears a gold cross necklace with the emblem worn under his shirt.

Entry- Van Rivera was a baseball player who resorted to using steroids and other performance-enhancing drugs. Taking these drugs made him subject to health problems and fits of anger. When news of the scandal broke, he was subject to criticism. The disgraced, down-and-out ex-ballplayer was approached by Chemist, who felt sorry for him in his negative state. She wanted him as a bodyguard and offered to help him beat his steroid addiction and cure its negative effects. The catch was that he also has to be a test subject. Needing help and seeing that Chemist truly wanted to give it, Van accepted her offer, gaining the nickname “Subject”. It should be noted that Chemist, Lou Ripken, and The White Tigress do not use this nickname, instead calling him by his real name. Subject helps protect Chemist while allowing her and The Chemical Man to test various chemical mixtures on him. In return, Chemist treats him and helps him with his issues.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Subject is intelligent and a good fighter with increased strength, endurance, and speed. He carries a pouch containing various weapons and other items. The silver studs over his knuckles give him a powerful punch.

Weaknesses- Subject’s repeated use of steroids and other performance-enhancing drugs has had a negative effect on both his physical and psychological health. However, he is now trying to quit. Chemist has noted that Subject “can’t aim worth a darn”. This is why he is given weapons such as knock-out gas grenades instead of a precision weapon (like a gun or crossbow). Raidra (talk) 16:52, December 22, 2014 (UTC)

That’s awesome! Hmm, Genie always seemed like a heroine to me, yet she’s classified as a villainess. I liked the White Tiger comment about having to arrest her if she causes too much trouble.

It has been noted several times here that Van hates the term Subject. Could this be because he wishes to once again be a renown and famous person, and resents the idea of being classified as a mere test subject? If I were him, that name would really cut me down.

So, who are Foam and Chemical Man? Are they heroes or villains in all of this?

If you don’t mind my asking; what inspired you to create Van and Genie? Are they based off real people, or are they an entirely original idea?

P.S. my racing game is going by swimmingly. When it is done, you'll be one of the first people to play it :D

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:33, December 22, 2014 (UTC)

I actually think of Genie as being more a heroine myself. I'm thinking of changing their status to "Neutral" or something else that better reflects their natures. I actually have a villain who's classified as both a Vigilante (because he stops muggers and such whenever possible) and a villain (because he teams up with a supervillain on occasion). One of my friends once noted I didn't have a lot of evil villains in my comics, and he's right. My villains range from creeps who would kill without a second thought to victims of circumstances. A lot of them are just misguided, which is why some of them end up becoming heroes. I have an issue in mind in which Genie helps a criminal trio, but the thing is, well, let's say they're low on the villainy ladder. They're called the Wacky Sub Gang and they fight a group of heroes called the Loser League, so that should tell you what you need to know. Genie helps them only because 1) it's a non-lethal chemical weapon (a laughing agent which dissipates quickly) and 2) she knows that the Loser League is likely to beat them, so there's nothing to worry about. White Tigress comes over to investigate afterward (she was dealing with a more serious threat earlier), and when Genie reveals who it was they both essentially laugh it off. Tigress's basic reaction is, "Oh, well, what was I worried about? Have a nice day!"

You hit it right on the head. Any time they call him "Subject", it's a reminder that he's not the same person he was before. It's like they're calling him a has-been or some other derogatory name. He wants to be viewed as an athlete and a person, not a tabloid headline.

Foam is actually one of Dart Tongue's top henchmen, so he's a villain who will reform and become a hero, just like his boss. He appears in my stories "The Houseguest", "The Binding Mask", and "Kumiho". His superpower is the ability to transform his body into liquid form. In addition to allowing him to stay underwater and enter locked buildings, this allows him to buffet opponents like a wave. He's so fast and powerful that he produces foam, hence his alias. I actually have an issue in mind in which he develops the same drug problem as Van. After losing honor, prestige, and respect, he goes to Genie for treatment. He's actually a fan of Van's, and while there he and Van become great friends. There's a scene I have planned in which Foam can't sleep. He walks through the house and when he passes by Van's room, he's in there watching his tapes. Foam comes in and they watch the game together. They watch in relative silence, but it's a bonding experience because they can tell they're going through the same thing. As for The Chemical Man, he's definitely a villain. He's a chemical genius like Genie, but he mainly sells his products to supervillains and criminals (as opposed to Genie who mainly focuses on medicines and other beneficial things). He becomes an adversary of a different heroine (a private eye) after he poisons one of her clients. He's not a murdering madman, but he's definitely a lot more dangerous with fewer morals. Lou Ripken is a racketeer who agreed to hire Van and Genie after seeing their potential. He's a criminal, but he has a definite set of morals and prides himself on being dependable. Since I wanted to convey dependability, I named him after baseball heroes Lou Gehrig and Cal Ripken, Jr, whom I have tremendous respect for. I thought, "I'm going to be in so much trouble if this is ever published!" but I didn't change it.

Genie isn't really based on anybody. One day I thought I'd like a character who uses non-lethal chemical weapons to get out of spots as quickly as possible. After I conceived Van I thought I'd like to have a chemical genius who could use her powers to help him and others. I also think Genie could represent the idea of helping others no matter what. As for Van, since you flat out asked if he were based on anyone, I won't hide it. He may be white, but he was inspired by Jose Canseco, whom I have mixed feelings about. It was after I saw a documentary called Jose Canseco: The Last Shot (a creepy yet fascinating film which actually did open with him watching a tape of one of his games with the Oakland A's, though I should note it didn't have the kind of experimental treatment found in my story). Some things in Van's Personality section are quotes I've heard or read about Canseco. For instance, David Cassidy said he was strong and intelligent with integrity after they were on a reality show together, one of his ex-girlfriends said he seemed to be in a trance when watching baseball games, and he himself said he didn't like to eat. Also, the part about not being able to aim worth a darn was based on his ill-fated pitching debut. That story will have to wait for another time... just like the story of the Wacky Sub Gang.

P.S- Yay! Raidra (talk) 14:48, December 24, 2014 (UTC)

Here's an addition to Genie's Personality section. "Though she makes and uses medicines for treating others, she believes it is important for people to be as drug-free as possible, and thus she also employs treatment methods such as counseling, massage, exercise, breathing techniques, and nature walks." Raidra (talk) 01:43, December 26, 2014 (UTC)
Heheh, the Loser League. Is this their theme song?
Speaking of theme songs, I’m having trouble deciding which one of these tunes should be my own. It was usually always this intimidating, awe-inspiring, hum-able tune. But lately I’ve been considering switching it to this glorious, empowering jingle.

Chemical Man sounds pretty cool. He’s the Venom to Genie’s Spiderman. By simply merging two existing names Lou Gehrig and Cal Ripken Jr., you should run into no trouble with publishing. They’re just people’s names, no one owns them. I’ll tell you who is going to get into copyright trouble, and it’s this guy. You just wait, when my racing game comes out, I’m gonna be dodging the Dodge people. You see, in the game, you TOTALLY don’t drive a Challenger 1971 R/T with Hemi engine xD Want to listen to the in-game radio? I promise you that’s not really the Rolling Stones on there!

So Genie represents unconditional heroism, and Van is based around the fallen hero type. Very interesting.

I’m looking forward to the story of the Wacky Sub Gang xD

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:24, December 27, 2014 (UTC)

Can't you just imagine? "And now, give a warm welcome to our heroes, the one and only LOSER LEAGUE!" ~"Loser" by Beck starts playing as the team takes the stage~ You know which theme song is best for you, but based on the description of your game, why not go with the one that's most recognizable and heavily copyrighted? ;-)

Yeah, Genie and Van complement each other well, don't they? I have a scene planned in which The Chemical Man tests a truth drug on Van. He doesn't harm Van, but Genie feels he wasn't as kind and respectful as he should have been. As he leaves Genie gives him a look, and as confident as he is The Chemical Man is unsettled because that's the first time he's seen Genie look resentful.

I've finished a couple of drafts. Would you like me to post them here, or on my user page? In any case, I hope to post a Wacky Sub Gang description tonight. Raidra (talk) 14:16, December 29, 2014 (UTC)

Okay, here's what I have so far for The Chemical Man's entry.

The Chemical Man

Secret identity- Arnold Wolfe

Birthplace- Pennsylvania

Occupation- chemical supplier

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- chemical genius, utility belt

Status- member of the Rixile Board

First appearance- WT#42

Appearance- The Chemical Man is a male Caucasian human with blond hair with three tufts. He occasionally has trembling fits. He wears a beige shirt, blue gray pants, a gray utility belt, reddish-brown gloves, and silver boots. Sometimes he wears a pair of clear rubber gloves instead of his customary ones.

Entry- Arnold Wolfe was a chemical genius who realized the money to be made in selling chemicals and chemical mixtures to criminals. Calling himself “The Chemical Man”, he formed a business called “Rixile”, which is “Elixir” spelled backwards. Rixile sells chemicals to legitimate buyers, but much of its business is criminal. It also has several major criminals, including Sloan Monev and Klartnova, as stockholders and members of its board. The Chemical Man supplied Lou Ripken with a dart containing a drug which induced a powerful fear of failure. Ripken used this dart to infect The Daring Dhole, who had to work hard to overcome the drug’s effects. Ripken spread the word about the Chemical Man’s services, and the two remain good friends. The Chemical Man first got Kayla Dimera’s attention when he poisoned Cool Jam. As Kayla’s investigations led her closer to the Chemical Man, he knew that a confrontation was unavoidable. After attacking a couple of her allies as a warning, he challenged her. Kayla was understandably nervous, but she refused to back down. The two had a lengthy battle which ended in the Chemical Man surrendering. However, he refused to divulge the names of his criminal clients and associates. Rixile continues to operate, though members of Shophetim combat his criminal operations. The Chemical Man sometimes suffers fits of trembling, something which troubles him.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- The Chemical Man is a chemical genius and is armed with a belt containing various weapons and other items.

Weaknesses- The Chemical Man sometimes suffers bouts of trembling, which may be a result of chemical exposure and/or psychological problems. This understandably causes him anxiety, but this does little to stop him.

Here's what I have so far for the Wacky Sub Gang's entry.

The Wacky Sub Gang

Secret identities- The members are named Nate, Carlos, and Gerald.

Birthplaces- Florida

Occupations- criminals

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- intelligence, mechanical ability, combat skill, weapons pouch

Status- members of LEAK (Loser Elimination Action Kingpins)

First appearance- LL#8

Appearance- Nate is a male Caucasian human with blond hair with three tufts. Carlos is a male Hispanic human. He has a light skin tone and red hair with three short tufts. Gerald is a Caucasian human of Italian heritage. He has black hair with two long, thin tufts. All three members of The Wacky Sub Gang wear grayish-blue costumes with gold collars, cuffs, belts with attached weapons pouches, gloves, and boots. Nate’s belt buckle is a white diamond while Carlos and Gerald have red orange circles for their belt buckles. Nate’s mask is pink and bears some resemblance to a squid. Carlos’s mask is blue and resembles the head of a Japanese movie monster. Gerald’s mask resembles a black motorcycle helmet with the image of a lime slice on both sides.

Entry- Nate, Carlos, and Gerald were three friends who were smart as well as good mechanics. They shared an affinity for both strangeness and lucre. Because of this, they decided to form a strange criminal gang. After making themselves costumes with unusual masks, they built a submarine which could travel on land and underwater. This sub had bizarre decorations, such as a shrimp-like tail and rubber chicken feet dangling from the bottom. Because of this, the trio, led by Nate, called themselves “The Wacky Sub Gang”. They began a crime spree, but were stopped by the Loser League. The Bouncy Brawler took the most delight in stopping the gang, earning their enmity. When the Wacky Sub Gang next appeared, they had created a gas which produced uncontrollable fits of laughter. After incapacitating S.N. Fever with this laughing agent, they mocked both him and The Bouncy Brawler. Outmatched, the angry Brawler swore revenge and took S.N. Fever back to the Lair of Losers. After he recovered, they, along with Umbriago, began to plan. The Wacky Sub Gang continued their crime spree, but they wound up again tasting defeat. Soon afterwards, they were broken out so they could join LEAK. The Wacky Sub Gang continues to plot their unusual robberies both alone and with LEAK, but The Bouncy Brawler and the other Loser Leaguers are always there to throw a monkey wrench into their plans.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- All three members of The Wacky Sub Gang are smart with the ability to build and repair machinery. They also know how to fight and are armed with pouches containing various weapons and other items.

Weaknesses- The Wacky Sub Gang is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.). Their masks protect against poison gas, so they can only be gassed if they’re not wearing their masks.

The laughing agent mentioned is the one Genie assisted them with, and yes, they tested it on Van.
Wacky Sub


I was designing the characters and thought it would be wacky to give one a mask resembling a squid. Then I came up with the monster mask. I was in a restaurant at the time, and for the third one I looked around for inspiration. I saw a picture of a lime slice and thought, "That'll do!" Raidra (talk) 01:16, December 30, 2014 (UTC)

Oh yeah, I can picture it. I can relate to it because Loser is the song that plays whenever I enter a room. I’m kidding, Zann Consortium theme will always be my theme. For my game I was actually planning on including real music, but I think I’ll scrap that idea. Also, I have to go out and record my own sounds. You wouldn’t happen to own a 1971 Dodge Challenger R/T with Hemi Engine, would you? If you do, think we can take it for a spin. I promise I’ll only set up like sixteen Go-Pros and Audio-Recorders inside the engine to get the sound effects!

You know, the entire time I was reading about the Sub Gang, I heard the Beatles “Yellow Submarine” in my mind. Is…is that their theme song?

The story of the Sub Gang dosing SN Fever with the laughing agent made me LOL. Imagine the poor Brawler having to drag his hysterical companion away from the mockery of the Sub Gang. It would be like taking a drunk friend home after a bar fight.

I’m really digging Chemical Man. He has such depth. I like the fact that you mentioned the tremors may have been caused by chemical exposure. Do you want to know the original meaning behind the term Mad Hatter? A long time ago, the Hat-makers would use Mercury to glue the brims of hats to the actual hat. This constant exposure to Mercury made some of the workers lose their minds a little. I was reminded of this while reading about Chemical Man.

One quick question on something that wasn’t quite clear. Was LEAK designed specifically for hunting Loser Leaguers?

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:14, December 31, 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for inviting me to the New Year's blog! I don't happen to have that kind of car, though. Sorry.

I'm glad you like the characters! I had heard about mad hatters, and I'm sure The Chemical Man thinks about it too (which in turn won't help his nerves appreciably). I hadn't thought about it, but I suppose "Yellow Submarine" could be their theme.  It's interesting how my friends/fans come up with things.  I have a villain called Viper Extreme (No, he's not a viper man; he's just a coldhearted crook who likes to use poison), and a friend of mine told me, "I imagine him sounding like a surfer dude."  I've thought about making this canon.  I have a character who can cloud people's minds, and sometimes he makes people hallucinate things related to Beatles songs (like an octopus in a garden by a cave).

LEAK is made up entirely of Loser League foes.  They banded together to form a supergroup dedicated to fighting the LL.  It's like the Legion of Doom in The Challenge of the Superfriends, but it's less Superman versus Lex Luthor and more Duck Dodgers versus Marvin the Martian.  As for the Bouncy Brawler, it might be more awkward (and therefore funnier) than you think.  As you might guess, her main power is the ability to bounce like a rubber ball, so when she's transporting him back to the Lair of Losers (Yes, that's the actual name of their hideout), she's actually holding him around his trunk and bouncing all the way there. Fun times! Raidra (talk) 03:16, January 1, 2015 (UTC)

Bouncy Brawler- This isn't over. ~BOING! BOING! BOING!~ Raidra (talk) 15:12, January 1, 2015 (UTC)

It’s fun for me to read about these characters and associate them with things in my mind. Can this character you describe make people see Strawberry Fields forever? Is there really anything to get hung about? Does it even matter to him xD Okay, I’m done.

You mean they devised an entire organization dedicated to fighting one single league that you describe as “Losers”. They don’t sound like Losers to me! However, now that you’ve informed me of Brawler’s superpower, it adds a certain air of derpiness to the entire situation that makes me want to live in this universe, if only to see that.

By the way, I cannot comment on Creepypasta Thanks anymore. So I’ll just leave my reply here.

I swear I’ve heard that one before. Really, what did the guy think would happen? The police would defend the trespasser from the evil house-owner? What must’ve been going on in his mind, I’ll never know.

You still have a VCR? Rai, Rairairai, you are like my hero. I’ve got all of these VHS tapes and I have nothing to play them in. They don’t sell machines like that anymore! I’ve been looking but so far everything has gone to CD, DVD, Blu-Ray. Etc. Treasure that VCR, it’ll be worth a ton of money one day xD

And you’re right. There are some who will think that every thread or blog has to be filled with comments directly related to the subject, with no room for expansion, but personally I don’t mind. It’s nice to just get carried away in a conversation, you know. Sorry that the blog is locked down, though.

And you’re welcome! Thanks for stopping by the blog, it means a lot to me. We’ve made Popular Blog Post this week, so we can spread the good cheer to the community, too :D Of course, the community will have to get used to the way we talk (which is to say, about everything off-topic) xD

Have a great 1st of the year, Rai!

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 22:26, January 1, 2015 (UTC)

Yep!  For one thing, I think videotaping shows is still the best way to record.  Also, I'm certainly not spending time and money to ditch my perfectly good tape collection to switch entirely to DVDs.  Besides, a few tapes are shows my late father taped for me years ago.  I know you can copy tapes to DVD, but it wouldn't be the same.  Besides, if a person switched because of people raving about DVDs, those same people would then rave about getting Blu-Rays instead.  It's like albums.  There were vinyl records and the "hip" people said, "Oh, cassette tapes are much more convenient!"  Then they said, "Oh, CDs are great!"  Then they said, "Oh, you need to get an mp3 player or iPod so you'll have all your songs at your fingertips!"  Now they're saying, "Oh, you know what's cool?  Vinyl!"  For all we know, video tapes, laser discs, and cassette tapes (even maybe Beta tapes and 8-tracks) will be the next craze.  In any case, don't get discouraged.  I've seen VCRs for sale online (check the sites for electronic stores and department stores as well as online auction sites) and in thrift stores.  I got a VCR at a local Goodwill store a couple years ago.  It's not the best for playing tapes you recorded yourself, but it's good for pre-recorded tapes.  We have a couple VCR/DVD players at our house (one is a Christmas gift my brother and I got our Mom one year so she could enjoy old and new movies).  However, the VCR on one isn't working at the moment, and as for the other, we haven't been able to work the DVD player since the remote for it died (It turns out technology is only as good as the remote's ability to withstand damage from leaky batteries), so until we get them fixed, it's like having a VCR and a DVD player.  I'd certainly be a selfish brat to complain, though. 

I'm glad you like the characters!  My friend Nick dubbed my comic book universe "the Karaverse".  Come to the Karaverse!  We have VCR/DVD players and pie!  The character I mentioned does have a "Strawberry Fields Forever" technique.  It's called "Strawberry Field" and in it he uses his thought clouding power to block someone's fear and pain.  It was inspired by the lyrics, "Let me take you down 'cause I'm going to/Strawberry Fields/Nothing is real/And nothing to get hung about..."  I'll have to post a list of his music-related techniques.  As for the Loser League, it's their way of addressing what critics may say.  It's like how Jimmy Durante made constant jokes about his nose (If you don't know who Durante is, treat yourself and do some investigating).  I'll have to post a Loser League line-up as well.

I'm sad that a couple of my blogs have been closed, but we sure did have fun.  "Memmmoriess...light the corners of my minddd..."  When it comes to the Creepypasta Thanks, I expressed my appreciation, gave some people good cheer, and received some in return, so I can't ask more than that.  We can continue to have fun and post random things elsewhere, and I look forward to it. 

I'd like to add that when it comes to pastas and long posts I generally do what you said you do- type them on MS Word.  That way when I want to post it's simply a matter of copying and pasting, giving it any needed clean-up, proofreading one more time, and clicking the "Publish" button.   I have a couple drafts ready and plan to post them sometime this week.  Take care! Raidra (talk) 01:07, January 5, 2015 (UTC)

I wonder if that is the true cycle of life. Humanity advances in technology, accelerates in thinking, and furthers its intelligence, only to be wiped out and forced to restart. From the burning of the Library Alexandria, to the rebirth of deeper thought in the Renaissance, we’ve been stuck in this loop of Low-tech, Middle-tech, High-tech. Tapes, CDs, Blu-Ray, etc. We finally reach the cutting edge of a laser saber, only to plummet down the ladder, forced to climb up with swords made of stone. So anyways, Mondays.

What you said about the cycle made me laugh. It is so painfully true. I saw this comic this one time that was something to the extent of two guys talking about Electric Light Orchestra. Another guy chimes in and says “Oh, hey, I have them on vinyl at home!” The first two guys are obviously displeased, “Oh, what a Hipster. He thinks he’s so cool because he has vinyl and everyone else has Mp3 and CDs. Go away, Hipster.”

And then the third guy replies with an aggravated “I bought them when they first came out, decades ago! And I bought them on vinyl because CDs and Mp3s hadn’t been invented yet! So, don’t call me a Hipster!” and then his face changes to one of grim acceptance, before he adds, “Call me old.”

Ahh, exploded batteries, how thou art the bane of the electronic devices which ye inhabit. Tell me, Raidra, did you use Duracell? Because if you don’t use Duracell, then…then...then I’ll just have to borrow you some xD

You think you’d be a selfish brat to complain about a broken VCR and DVD player? Raidra, when my WiFi disconnects, I rampage through the city, leaving a wake of ash in my path, belting lyrics to the Derp song in a fit of rage. Don’t worry about looking spoiled.

Strawberry Field. Hmm, it does seem like it could put one in a trance, but it also seems like it would sharpen the focus of an opponent, given that it utterly removes fear from whoever is under its effects. Imagine using such a power on a Jedi, who becomes the ultimate warrior once he lets go of fear. Perhaps this titular character could use the Strawberry Field on his allies to boost their strength and willpower! Or maybe that’s what he already does...

See? You don’t want me in the Karaverse. I’d over-think everything! What flavor is that pie? Is this pie…symbolic in nature?

Did I ever tell you that you are very smart? I can just name something, and you can tell me all about it. I can rely on you to answer my dumb questions like “How much does Sandstone weigh?” or “Approximately how fast do I have to drive in order to successfully evade the Dodge Copyright Police in a totally not stolen Dodge Challenger?”

So, I’m reading everything you’ve written above... “It's like how Jimmy Durante made constant jokes about his nose” and I’m thinking “I know that name. But…from where? Who is this guy, again?” ...and then I read... “(If you don't know who Durante is, treat yourself and do some investigating)”...and that struck me as hilarious, like Charlie Brown trying to kick a football. At that moment I was like “Oh crap, I’m on my own. Okay…I will do some investigating. I…I know how to do that!”

So, I went and did some investigating and found out that Durante is the narrator of my childhoods many Christmases, narrating Frosty the Snowman. He’s also that jerk that sent all of those people on a wild Goose-chase in Mad Mad World.

So, apparently I’m not completely lost without you, because, as we have seen, you have your vast wealth of knowledge and intelligence…


And I have mine.

I, too, enjoy the fun we have. I’m glad you enjoyed the success of your Thanks blog, I am glad to have been a part of it! And yes, I am familiar with the MS Word cycle. For me it’s more like Write, Proofread in Word, Copy/Paste, Change the double (‘) symbols to Italics because sometimes they don’t read automatically, Post, Prooread Again, Realize I spelled everything wrong, Repeat. I just hope Im not speling anything wrong, That woud be embarassing

Let me know when those drafts go up. I’ll check ‘em out. Thanks, and have a great day!

P.S. That “Anyways, Mondays” was actually based on an excerpt from a Chris Bucholz article. He begins by moping about how he has no life, and talking about how his existence is insignificant, and how he doesn’t matter in the grand scheme of things, and he fears his death is near. It’s a very deep, sorrowful paragraph, which he ends with “Anyways, Mondays.” And then you realize that all he needs is some coffee, is all xD

I’ve always wanted to use that joke, but every time and opportunity arises, it’s Tuesday D:<

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 22:30, January 5, 2015 (UTC)

I have Duracells for some things, but I don’t know what kind these were. They were red and black, whatever they were. Thanks a lot, generic batteries! You know how they have portable DVD players in real life? I’m thinking of having portable VCR's in the Karaverse. Let’s hope they use the proper batteries! You’re right, Strawberry Field is a technique for helping allies and innocents rather than an attack. He has a similar technique called “Octopus’s garden” (creatively named after the song “Octopus’s Garden”) in which the subject imagines that they’re being comforted by an octopus in a shaded garden near an underwater cave. He first uses the two techniques to help a hero who’s rattled from something that happened earlier. He uses the Strawberry Field technique first, explaining what he’s doing. Then he notes, “If you’d prefer, there’s this,” and uses the Octopus’s garden technique. He asks, “Is that better?” and the hero replies, “It is, oddly enough.”

If you think the pie in the Karaverse is confusing, then you should see the card games! I sometimes show characters playing cards. However, even I don’t what they’re playing because all I ever have them do is stare at the cards! They’re obviously not playing poker, so maybe they’re playing Go Fish or Gin Rummy and they really want to take their time and make sure they don’t mess things up, or maybe it’s some contest of wills. Of course, it’s not that different from the poker tournaments I see a few seconds of in the process of flipping through the channels. I swear I have never seen them deal cards – all they do is stare thoughtfully while absentmindedly fussing with their poker chips. Excitement!

~blushes~ Well, thank you! I read extensively (mainly non-fiction), my family knows the importance of a good education, and I watch or read a lot of countdowns (It’s amazing how much you can learn from a good countdown). See, I had faith that you could find out who Durante was! He’s also one of the celebrities that was frequently lampooned in numerous 1940s cartoons. Shoot, occasionally they still lampoon him today! The legend lives on! Ironically, I taped It’s a Mad, Mad, Mad, Mad World off Turner Classic Movies. The funniest part is when Durante’s character, in the process of dying, literally kicks the bucket. I crack up every time I see that bucket rolling down the hill. The other funniest scene is when the emergency crew is at the airfield in case there’s a crash landing. It pans to show the rescue workers, and it shows three firemen that are clearly played by The Three Stooges. Even the description of the scene on Wikipedia (at least, when I checked it years ago. I don’t know if the description is still there) is funny. It noted that the scene lasted less than two seconds, there was no dialogue, and the Stooges stood stock-photo still. It was assumed that the mere sight of those three as “potential savers of life and limb” would be “sufficient to convey the humor.” I thought, “It was!”

I’m glad for the well-wishes and fun times, and I’m also glad you got to use that joke on a Monday! I hope to have a draft posted to this talk page in the next 30-60 minutes, which sounds vaguely like a horror movie threat. Very soon now! ~laughs maniacally~ Raidra (talk) 04:31, January 7, 2015 (UTC)

Okay, so now I’m guilty of a late reply. I go on here and I have a list of people who need me, things I need to get done, yadda yadda yah. I think to myself “We'll get this done and then we’ll go talk to Raidra.” Save the best for last as it were ;) But when I finish all of my work it’s also waaaay too late to stay on the internet anymore! So that’s why I’ve been absent from here, but present literally everywhere else.

Don’t tell everyone else I said that.

Red and Black Batteries? Were they…>gasp< Energizer?? Ohhh >faints<

Portable VCRs? Those things will be the size of briefcases, and weigh twice as much! What a perfectly wacky thing to fit into the Karaverse. And as far as the card games, they’re obviously playing Bridge. I mean come on; look at the stances. The focus!

I hope you’re not being sarcastic when you say Poker Tournaments are exciting. They are so wizard, they don’t even need to deal cards. They manifest on the table in a small but fiery explosion! 

I kinda lol’ed in an awkward way when I thought about the hero’s reaction to the Octopus treatment. If someone did that to me, and asked me how I feel afterward, I’d probably say “Me Gusta”. (literally Spanish for “It pleases me”, also Internet slang for “It’s weird but I kinda like it” Yeah, that would be an appropriate response.

You’re welcome! I can tell that you were well-raised, what with your value for intelligence and polite mannerisms. Thanks for having faith in me, by the way. During my desperate search, my computer notified me “You’ve turned off your spell-check. Is there something wrong?” but I wasn’t listening because I kept hearing your voice in my mind saying “Uuuuse the search engine, Tyber.”

That reference is not as funny unless you’ve seen Star Wars.

I absolutely love Mad World. My favorite part was when the two mechanics were fighting the Trucker guy. They tore down the entire garage, didn’t they? My favorite line was “Alright, Jim, were going to have to kill him!” I was laughing so hard that I started laughing while breathing in (a reverse laugh, as it were).

I also liked the Three Stoges cameo. They played the main melody to “Three Blind Mice” when the camera panned to see them. Very fitting. Also the first time I’ve ever seen them in color!

Thanks for being so patient. I’m glad I got to reply in time. I’ll also be posting something special to your Talk Page tomorrow if I get the chance. Sleep in fear tonight >laughs manically<

I totally know how it is. You have something you want to do, or people ask you for favors, and when you're done you're worn out and/or it's getting late. I've been there many times. Still, in the end you have fun.
For the record, I think they were some kind of generic batteries. I'm not sure. As for the portable VCRs, why not make that another store in your game? Kara's Portable VCR and DVD Player Emporium! If we keep up, we'll have a whole town full of whimsical and wacky stores! Love can build a bridge, and off-beat imaginations can build a business district. Speaking of bridges, I hadn't thought about Bridge, but that's possible. Just because I don't know how to play it doesn't mean my characters don't. If they can build stealth jets out of scrap metal and computer parts, then they can play bridge, right? As for poker tournaments, since everything can change with the turn of a card, I'm sure they are exciting. Just not the ones I come across flipping through the channels.
I thought of a way that Strawberry Field, normally a healing technique, could be used offensively. If a wounded person were fighting while under its influence, they'd keep fighting because they wouldn't feel pain or fear. This could lead to their injuries becoming worse, leading to the subject passing out or suffering disabling injuries. Plus, the character could stop the technique after the subject has aggravated their injuries, leading to crippling pain. I also thought that if a Loony Tunes character were under the influence of the Octopus's Garden technique, they'd probably bring out a bottle of liquor from its hiding place and toss it away.
Don't worry, I got the Star Wars reference. I haven't seen the episode myself (or maybe I did and I just didn't catch the reference), but I read that there was an episode of Mystery Science Theater 3000 (one of the funniest shows ever) in which there was a scene with a service station being destroyed/attacked, and one of the characters joked, "They just rebuilt the place from Jonathan Winters's rampage."
I'll tell Mom that you said I was well-raised because that's a compliment to her and my late father too. Well, I've used up my mental energy at the moment, so I'll talk to you later! Take care! Raidra (talk) 17:34, January 12, 2015 (UTC)

Indeed, the work of a Creepypasta Member is never done. There are always stories to be reviewed, threads to reply to, blogs to post, and an awesome friend on your Talk page to hang out with xD

I do have fun, though. I want to dig my roots in this place, as I’ve said before. I want to help out, to do some good. The reward is more than worth it!

Aww, you remembered my little game; that means a lot to me! One of the levels of the game is going to need a lot of buildings, so any and all of your ideas are appreciated. I promise your name will be in the credits in big blue letters in any font you like…except Comic Sands >shivers< I hate that one!

“Love can build a bridge, and off-beat imaginations can build a business district.”

^ That quote ^ I will remember it until I die.

Ahh, yes. Dropping someone off of the Strawberry Field while they’re hurt would really mess them up. It’s sort of like when your pain meds wear off after surgery. I met a doctor once who described it as “Getting hit with a Mac truck.” Yikes!

Mystery Science Theater 3000! I’ve heard so much about that! Is it truly as funny as everyone says? You know, when you said that you may have not seen Star Wars, I was tempted to make a joke. I was going to be all like “Blaspheeeeemer!” but I realized that I couldn’t get mad because I still haven’t seen Mystery Theater xD

I just love Star Wars, though.

So, what did your Mom think about me? Nothing bad, I hope! Take care : )

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:32, January 19, 2015 (UTC)

Sure I remembered your game! Here's another idea- a perfume store called the One-Stop Scent Shop. I'll let you know if I think of any others. As for the font, Verdana or Papyrus might be nice, but it doesn't matter as long as it's not one of those fonts with symbols instead of letters. I mean, what's the point of giving your businesses funny names if most people can't decipher the signs?
I haven't seen the original Star Wars, but I have seen The Empire Strikes Back and Return of the Jedi. When I saw them, they were considered the second and third movies, but now they're considered fifth and sixth. I don't mind them being given new rankings; I just don't want people getting uptight about it. As for MST3K, tastes vary, but I personally think it was one of the funniest shows ever made. I have to avoid eating and drinking while watching that and Whose Line Is It Anyway? (or at least wait until commercial breaks) because I might get choked or have water come out my nose. It seriously almost happened a couple of times.
No, Mom didn't have anything bad to say about you. She appreciated your comments. Raidra (talk) 02:15, January 24, 2015 (UTC)

It sounds awesome! I’m hoping to work more on my game this week, so I will include that shop. I’ll have an entire level just dedicated to all of these wacky buildings. I’ll probably go with Verdana, and I’ll try to avoid the temptation of using MiniPics xD  

I've heard of "Whose Line is it Anyway?". What's that one about? Is it like a game show?

Good, I'm glad I have her approval. I'm also glad I haven't made too much of a fool of myself during our time on the Wiki : D 

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:42, February 3, 2015 (UTC)

Whose Line Is It Anyway? jokingly pretends to be a game show, but it's really an improv comedy show. The performers are given suggestions on what to do (such as pitching an album of The Greatest Hits of Plumbers or The Greatest Hits of Kindergarten, doing a prison scene in which they can only speak in song titles, or re-enacting famous movie scenes as cartoon characters) and then perform scenes based on those suggestions. The host or hostess (Aisha Tyler currently hosts the show) then awards points, often while jokingly reminding people how the points don't matter. Back in 2000 or so, Drew Carey noted, "The points don't matter, just like the twenty-dollar bill Tiger Woods finds in the pocket of a jacket he hasn't worn in a while!" Occasionally they get more risque than I like, but overall it's a good show.
"This week"? Yikes, I need to submit the other suggestions I thought of! Some are more whimsical than others, and you're certainly not obligated to add these. Feel free to use any you like.
  • A restaurant called My Name is Barbeque (I know puns like this ought to be illegal, but I've got nothing to be guilty of, 'cause my love for this game is one in a million!)
  • Torch, Pitchfork, and Cotton Candy Emporium (This was inspired by an episode of SpongeBob SquarePants in which a terrible song sparked a riot. The mob got torches and pitchforks from a couple vendors and then encountered a third vendor shouting, "Cotton candy! Can't have a riot without cotton candy!" They stopped and looked like, "Really?" before continuing. Me, I would have preferred the cotton candy!)
  • Bale's Christian Bookstore
  • Yentyl's Judaica Shop (I was tempted to name it M.Gibson's Judaica Shop)
  • Bradbury Bookstore (Why not name a bookstore after a great author who had a book about book-burning?)
  • Legend Video Rental (This was inspired by that movie clip you showed me)
  • A record store called Boatload of Records (because you look at the achievements of some athletes and realize that they have a boatload of records)
  • Pampered Furball Pet Salon (This was inspired by a lighthearted comment a friend of mine made recently)
  • Cuddly, Cool, and Creepy Pet Store (One day years ago my cousin and I were looking around at a pet store. We went into a room with exotic pets. I was looking over the lizards when I heard my cousin, in a soft, quavering voice, say, "I am getting out of here, and I am not looking back." I turned and saw that she was looking at a display of tarantulas)
  • A restaurant called McArby's (This is something I came up with years ago, though you probably couldn't get away with it)
  • Mary M's Chili Depot (This is named after my mother, who makes chili as good as any restaurant)
  • William's Greengrocers (This is named after my father, whose middle name, believe it or not, was "Green." It was his father's first name.)

Be sure to let me know. Good developing! Raidra (talk) 01:05, February 5, 2015 (UTC)

RE: More like Rosetta Clone'd

It's clearly a copy/paste of JtK. The author can't even stick to one language. They shift from Greek, to demotic, to hieroglyphics. (It looks sloppy.) I'l get around to taking it down as soon as the Holidays (and security) winds down some.

Yes... a joke... Clearly the Rosetta Stone isn't in any danger of me spray-painting "marked for review" onto it due to its sudden language changes and boring plot. Seriously, look at that wall of text and read that 'story'! Time for me to go all iconoclast on it. Btw, Skel actually has a pretty good sense of humor, it's pretty dry (bone dry), but entertaining. Just a matter of knowing someone.
Clearly as the wonderfully kind messages on my talk page imply, I have a sound mind. As for poking LOLSKELETONS while he slumbers... I might advise not doing that.
You could say he enjoys a good ribbing. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:57, December 31, 2014 (UTC)
EmpyrealInvective (talk) 02:21, December 27, 2014 (UTC)

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:01, December 31, 2014 (UTC)

Van's Nightmare Draft

Here it is! As you can see, I've made some changes to what I posted earlier. I hope you enjoy it.

Van Rivera turned off his television set and pulled up the bed sheet to cover his form. He looked at the clock radio and saw that it was just past two in the morning. He let out a sigh. It hadn’t been a good night so far, and he had the feeling it wasn’t going to improve all that much all that soon. He thought about how he used to spend his nights during the highlight of his playing career. He smiled as he reminisced, but within a few minutes a feeling of sadness and loss, and even a little guilt, came over him.

He turned onto his side. Critics had made an issue of the time he was found asleep in the clubhouse during a game. After his drug use came to light some speculated that his late-game nap was the result of that. Maybe a dose of something had worn off too early, they said, or maybe he had taken too much of something. The truth was he had experienced sleep problems before. There had been previous occasions in which he’d nodded off during a monotonous task. Most of the time falling asleep was merely embarrassing. However, there was that time that he’d nodded off while driving home one night. He didn’t like to think about that, about how he could have died that night. Last week, when Genie had given him the car keys and told him, “I trust you,” he became notably moved. She commented on this, but she didn’t know the full reason for his gratitude. He hadn’t told her about his accident years ago. He didn’t think she needed to know about it. He didn’t think anyone needed to know about it.

The last few weeks had been intense. The title Genie had given herself during their introduction was “chemist”, in this case meaning both an expert in chemistry and a British druggist. She had an innate skill in making medicines and other things. At first Van was unsure of her offer to treat his addiction with her experimental drug, but she had convinced him of her sincerity and concern. Within days of their first meeting Van began aversion therapy using her drug – the drug which caused adverse side-effects whenever he injected himself with his poison of choice. When he injected himself hours after receiving a half-dose of the medicine he became nauseous, washed-out, and delirious. It took him a full day to recover. When he injected himself hours after receiving the full dosage, he was in mid-sentence when he immediately found himself having to rush to the toilet to vomit as nausea hit him like a mallet. In addition to the vomiting, the drug also induced weakness and hallucinations. At times he imagined that evil spirits were tearing him apart, starting with his arms and moving on to his back and legs. At other times he imagined his body was falling apart or wasting away, atrophying as he watched in helplessness and horror. It took him four days to recover, his symptoms gradually easing each day. His last shot – the one he intended to be his very last shot – was over a fortnight ago. Though his muscles were sore from the withdrawal, he had regained his strength. His voice was no longer rough & strained, and his stomach & throat no longer burned like a hot grill.

The whole process had been nightmarish, but thankfully Genie was there to support him every step of the way. Occasionally he got irate and snapped at her, but she took it in stride. During those days in which it seemed all he could do was vomit into the toilet or a trash can, she had brought him cool, creamy nutrition drinks to provide relief and nourishment. In his weakened state he had struggled with the pull-tabs, but she had let him open the cans himself in respect for his pride. After the fits of vomiting had ebbed and he had wearily retreated to bed, she had applied analgesics to stem the flow of pain in his throat and stomach, and even spoon-fed him soothingly warm soup. During his recovery she had administered massage therapy in addition to developing a therapeutic bath which helped soothe his sore muscles. Genie had told Van that she wanted to hire him as a bodyguard after he recovered from his withdrawal period and was healthy again. However, it had become clear to Van that Genie’s motives weren’t simply business-related, nor were they self-serving. She did want him as a bodyguard, but she also cared about his well-being. Van had met a lot of people in his life, so he had become good at seeing people’s true characters and intentions, at knowing which people wanted to exploit him and which people genuinely supported him. He could tell that even if he couldn’t be of any use to her, Genie still would have approached him about helping him in his recovery.

He started reflecting on this. He bore her no malice because he could tell that this ordeal was painful for her, too. In fact, he thought he saw her close to tears one night. She wasn’t some creep who got off on making others suffer, nor was she an enabler who enjoyed lording over the sick. It was quite the opposite. She was only subjecting him to this torment so he could break free of his addiction and have a happy, healthy life in the future. The notion of causing suffering for future benefit reminded him of someone. At one point, as Genie took care of him in his delirium, Van watched her and experienced a flashback of his late mother. He had thought of his mother numerous times during this ordeal. He found himself thinking, “How would she feel if she could see what I’ve- ” before shelving that thought for the moment. He instead decided to focus on the present and future.

The aversion therapy helped cement Van’s determination to get and stay clean. He looked forward to this new chapter in his life, but he also knew there'd be challenges. He was already feeling the physical and psychological effects of the withdrawal. He had been experiencing insomnia as a result of his anxiousness. He had a collection of videotapes of his old games, as well as a couple DVD collections of highlights from the championship teams he’d been a part of, on the television shelf. Recently he had spent many nights watching them, watching moments from his glory days. He’d stretch out on his bed and stare as though entranced at the images of his former self – images which now seemed like shadows. In addition he had been experiencing vivid dreams lately. He didn’t know if they were due to the anxiety as well or to residual effects of the medication. It was unsettling what he saw in some of his dreams, and what they brought to mind. In some dreams he imagined going about his daily routine and suddenly discovering that he was missing body parts, or he saw his muscles falling off his body like a hot pat of butter sliding off a roasted ear of corn. In others he imagined glaring eyes, mocking voices, and figures stalking him. He could understand what these dreams represented, so he just tried to acknowledge them, shake them off, and move ahead. He reflected some more before finally drifting off.

Sometime later his mind regained consciousness. He could see a younger version of himself sitting on a bed in what appeared to be a small clinic. He recognized the scene from the previous times he had experienced this nightmare, but he could do nothing to stop it. He might as well have been tied to a chair with his eyes propped open. A figure entered the room. Van thought he looked familiar, but his features were warped into a demonic appearance. He gave Van a wicked grin filled with shark-like teeth. He started toward him with a large, sinister-looking hypodermic needle. Van began to have frightening hallucinations of what the mysterious poison in the syringe might do to him. “Get away from me with that!” he cried as roughly as he could, hoping to drive the fiend away.

It was to no avail. Two more demonic-looking creatures suddenly appeared before Van could get off the bed. They too resembled people he had known. They grabbed his arms and violently shoved them down onto the bed. This forced Van’s whole upper body to go down as well, and he hit the back of his head hard enough that he saw stars. Before Van could offer any resistance they strapped him to the bed. The younger fiend grinned at Van with a mouth filled with jackal-like fangs. The older one simply looked at him coldly.

The two assistant fiends stood back to watch the proceedings as the fiend with the needle came to Van’s side. A trickle of blood came from both corners of his mouth as he asked, “This is what you wanted, isn’t it?”

“No! I didn’t want any of this!”

Despite Van’s protests, the fiend made a small mark on Van’s otherwise unblemished body. There was an aching in Van’s chest as feelings of dread and despair intensified. His breathing and heart rate increased rapidly. As tears started to flow down his cheeks he felt his heart, liver, and kidneys turn into melted wax and flow through his system. The fiend dramatically raised the needle high before forcibly thrusting it down into Van’s body.

The climax of the nightmare jolted Van awake. For a minute or two he lay still in bed, almost if paralyzed. Then he got up and walked around to try to clear his head. He was more unsettled by this dream than the others. It wasn’t because of the content, but because of what the dream brought to mind. Every time he had this dream it forced him to think about his past. In the dream the drugs were injected into his system against his will, but in reality he had brought them into his life willingly. True, the pusher had offered, but Van had accepted his offer with little hesitation. He willingly became a user, and then later he introduced others to the drugs as well. He couldn’t blame his coaches, his teammates, or even his dealers because none of them had forced him to do what he had done. He could only blame himself. There was no changing that fact.

Instead of walking in a circle or pacing back and forth he came to the wall and stopped. He placed his arm up against the wall to brace himself, not because he was feeling weak or in despair, but because he wanted to gather his thoughts and steel his resolve. He had gotten himself into this, but he wasn’t going to give up. He was going to keep moving forward. If Genie didn’t believe he could do it, she wouldn’t have approached him in the first place, and more importantly, he wouldn’t have accepted her offer if he didn’t believe he could do it. He had already done better than his critics would have expected, and he was determined to keep on defying expectations. He smirked as he thought how disappointed his critics would be when they saw him well and healthy. Tomorrow he would tell Genie about these nightmares, get it out of his system so it wouldn’t be an issue anymore. From then on, nothing in the past, present, or future was going to get in his way. Raidra (talk) 04:42, January 7, 2015 (UTC)

Wow. Just…wow. That was absolutely beautiful. No, no, I’m not crying. It’s just my allergies!

I thought the story was good to begin with, but this new draft improves upon it in so many ways. Your descriptions of the nightmare are pretty terrifying, but also heart-breaking. The audience is both afraid and crushed to see this happen to the protagonist.

As I’ve said before, the nightmare of an addiction and the recovery process are both real, physical terrors that strike hundreds of people across the world. The way you described Van’s thoughts, feelings, and reactions made them seem so genuine, so real. I feel like this is a story that could (and probably has) really happen(ed). That’s what makes it so tear-jerking, in my opinion.

I absolutely loved the ending. It was so motivating. If I ever know someone who needs to be picked up, I’m sending this story to them.

And one of my favorite parts about the story is that there are literally no grammatical/spelling errors…at least none that I could find.

This will be the first 10 of 10 I’ve ever given, Raidra. You've more than earned it.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:07, January 9, 2015 (UTC)

Oh, wow! ~blushes~ Thanks! Thank you for both the glowing review/perfect score and for the advice/feedback you gave the early draft on the Creepypasta Nightmares blog. I'm glad to hear you use words like "genuine" and "real" to describe this story, and I find it interesting to see the terms "heart-breaking" and "tear-jerking" used as well. In addition to creating a frightening experience I really wanted to create sympathy for Van and show some of his inner workings, display Genie's caring side, and show Van's resoluteness, and I'm happy to hear that I succeeded. While part of addiction recovery is physical, a big part of it is psychological. A lot of recovering addicts have to get used to life without the drugs (or whatever their addiction is), and they have to overcome their fears and doubts about the future. You have to have compassion and understanding. I wanted to show the fear Van was experiencing while still making it clear that he was going to overcome this thing.
Out of curiosity (and I apologize if this sounds too much like a survey) what were the parts that you thought were the most terrifying and the most moving? You don't have to answer if you don't feel like it. I'd just like to compare and contrast with what I thought as I wrote it. Personally I think the scariest parts were the "like a hot pat of butter" scene and the scene in which the fiend is about to inject him. Interestingly, after writing that scene I wondered, "How did I come up with the part about the melted wax?" Then I realized that in the process of trying to describe suffering I was subconsciously thinking of Psalm 22:14 - "I am poured out like water, and all my bones are out of joint: my heart is like wax; it is melted in the midst of my bowels." I like to think the most moving parts are the parts talking about his relationship with Genie and the end when he decides that he's going to beat this thing. In any case, I'm honored that you thought so highly of this and found it to be effective. I'll have to post it as a pasta tomorrow or the next day, and I'll also be posting my other draft soon. Take care! Raidra (talk) 02:54, January 9, 2015 (UTC)

Oh, it’s no trouble at all. I’d be happy to answer any questions, and I’m glad you’re happy with the review. I search far and wide for excellent stories like this one. I think that the most terrifying part was when you described the “fiends” appearances. That was like something out of Silent Hill (Warning: that picture is slightly scary. but it's on Wikia so it's safe.). I think that the line about Van introducing drugs to others was also pretty scary. Now not only is he a user, but he is possibly placing others on the same Pain-Train as himself. Not good. And of course the part where he dreams about suddenly not having body parts or even rotting away was also pretty scary. I think I had a nightmare about something like that when I was a kid. Scary stuff, indeed xD

And as for the moving parts? I’ll tell you what, at the very end when you are building up Van’s resolve to make the decision to change, and you wrote “He smirked as he thought how disappointed his critics would be when they saw him well and healthy.” I literally got the same sly smirk on my face when I read that. You are influencing my facial expressions, Raidra! That was such a great ending, though; such buildup.

And I thought the part about hot wax was pretty nifty; a very interesting way of looking at it. I liked the way it parallels with the Psalm. I like a lady who knows the Bible! In fact, after reading that verse I thought about the other one that goes “Make me to hear joy and gladness, Let the bones which You have broken rejoice. Hide Your face from my sins And blot out all my iniquities. Create in me a clean heart, O God, And renew a steadfast spirit within me.…”

Blot out my iniquities? Kind of like the drugs (sin, or iniquity), melting out of his soul like hot wax? This is what symbolism looks like!

I’m also glad that we got to see Genie’s paragon nature, as well.

By the way, if this becomes a book or a movie, you should have this part in the behind-the-scenes, “A lot of recovering addicts have to get used to life without the drugs (or whatever their addiction is), and they have to overcome their fears and doubts about the future. You have to have compassion and understanding. I wanted to show the fear Van was experiencing while still making it clear that he was going to overcome this thing.”

That’s pretty insightful and also motivating. I think it’d make a good tag-along with the story!

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:56, January 11, 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback! You're right, that passage (Psalms 51:8-10) fits the situation perfectly. I like a gentleman who knows the Bible! All in all there's another parallel to Psalm 22. It features suffering, but in the end there's hope. You know, you're pretty smart yourself. I say that not because you gave my drafts a positive review (though that does indicate you're a man of taste and discernment ;-)), but because you pick up on symbols. At times you've even picked up on things that I hadn't thought about myself, at least not consciously. Here's one you probably picked up on. The fiend injecting Van represented the dealer who introduced him to the drugs, the older fiend holding him down represented his coaches (who may have been ignorant or who may have turned a blind eye to his drug use), and the younger fiend holding him down represented his teammates (some of whom he introduced to drugs). That's why he awoke and reflected on how in real life he couldn't blame anybody but himself. It's safe to say Van's days of introducing people to drugs are over. As part of his sobriety he'll deal with the guilt stemming from past actions and resolve to help others. In fact, in my story "Kumiho" he's helping Genie treat another addict - both actively (by helping him after he suffers a hallucination) and passively (by showing that recovery is possible). I've posted "Van's Nightmare" and linked it and "Kumiho" to each other, so regardless of which one you go to first you can get to the other one easily. As for the part that you quoted, do you think I should add it to the story itself, maybe as an afterword? In any case, I meant every word. Raidra (talk) 01:45, January 12, 2015 (UTC)

As a bonus here's a drawing I thought about using as an illustration.
VN Fiend

I might not use it because even though I'm happy with how it turned out, I don't think it quite captures the horror of the nightmare. I think I'll leave the story as it is (without illustrations) so readers can form an image in their own minds. Oftentimes the scariest things are what you imagine. Raidra (talk) 01:22, January 15, 2015 (UTC)

Awww, so many nice words! Thanks so much for all of the compliments, you’re really making my weekend, here. You’ve got to be one of the best writer’s I’ve seen on this site. You know, my favorite part of the Bible goes like this “In the beginning, God made the sea, but on the seventh day, he made Tyber Z” Okay so maybe that’s not quite how it goes xD

Note: Joke is more funny if you like Prince music.

I do pick up on symbols, sometimes ones that aren’t even intentional. Sometimes it can be interesting to play the detective and dive deep between the lines, and see the signs and symbols. Sometimes it can even be a little creepy. I got really deep into the Fallout Numbers Station one time. I thought those codes were so interesting that I tried putting a numbers station in one of my own video games xD

Unfortunately, I was too busy being scared of the fiends to think about how they parallel real people. So…I guess I didn’t catch that one xD

It’s nice to see Van recovered and restored to his former status. I shall read and review Kumiho sometime soon. I’m looking forward to it.

Eh, you should probably put the commentary at the end. It’ll give more impact to the reader, plus it won’t spoil the ending. Do it as an afterward. Put it in all italics. It’ll look awesome.

And, although I like that image, I think you should leave the story as is. The descriptions are enough to freak people out xD

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:04, January 19, 2015 (UTC)

I went ahead and added the afterword. Let's hope you didn't steer me wrong, right? ;-) I also added the passage from Psalms as an introduction because it's so appropriate for the story. Thanks again! Raidra (talk) 01:09, January 25, 2015 (UTC)
You're welcome! I'll transfer the reviews soon!
Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:43, February 3, 2015 (UTC)

Review Request

Hi Tyber, I've now read two of your stories and thought that they were genius so I came to check out your page. Then I saw that you wanted us to leave review requests so I'd really like you to review my first story! It's titled "Rats", I'm not sure how to leave a link and I'm not sure what Tildes are (even though those are your requirements for leaving a review request) but it would mean a lot if you checked it out!


-Natalo Natalo (talk) 08:54, January 10, 2015 (UTC)

Hey, thanks for stopping by! It means a lot to me that you took the time to dust off my old stories and give them a read. I'm glad you enjoyed them!

I've read and reviewed Rats. I thought it was very good, but you can read the review and see the rest of my opinion for yourself. You have a lot of potential, I'm looking forward to seeing your future stories.

To answer your question, Tildes look like this ~ On a keyboard, they're in the upper left corner. On a mobile device, you'll have to go into Numbers or Symbols to find them.

To leave a link, you need to type in some simple code. For a link to a page on this Wiki, you type in this ((Storynamegoeshere)) except instead of parenthesis, you use these boxes [ and ] so, in your case, it would be "Rats"

If you want to leave a link to a separate website, you type in this

( link title goes here)

Once again, replace those parenthesis with these boxes [ and ] so, if you want to link someone to it will look like this

Or you could just write out the link manually:

In the editor, however, there is also a little button with a picture of a chain link (Sometimes it looks like Earth with a piece of paper on it) on it called Link. Clicking this button will automatically set up the boxes for you, so all you have to do is type in what you want to link to.

It's a tricky process, I know, but I promise it's easier than it sounds!

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 10:04, January 10, 2015 (UTC)

Masks for Sale Draft

Here's the draft for the other story I mentioned. I hope it's a chiller! There's one line in particular I think is disturbing. Let me know what you think.

After cashing the checks, money orders, and such, I return to the office to get down to business. I’ve made quite a profit selling gas masks and protective gear. Business is good. After putting part of the money in the safe and in the cashbox, I look over the stacks of orders. There are two orders in what I call “the exempt pile”. One order included an explanatory message saying that the customer thought it might be prudent to get a mask because there had been a couple of disasters near where she lived. I can sympathize. The other is from a guy saying he didn’t care about any special features; he just wanted a cool mask to wear to an upcoming party. That’s fine by me. It even strikes me as a little amusing for some reason. I take care of those orders first, carefully packaging the masks and making sure to set them apart from the others. After that’s done I tally the number of orders in the other stack, what I call “the special orders pile”. Once I’m sure of how many masks I’ll need to prepare, I fetch the required number and bring them into the back room to begin the process.

Safety is the primary thing. First I inspect my gloves and apron, and finding no flaws I put them on. Then I don my best gas mask and make sure it’s working as it should. With everything in order, I take one of the masks from its container, grab one of the jars from off the shelf, and get to work. I pride myself on the thoroughness with which I work. By the time I’m done working on a mask, it’s like the poison is bonded to the rubber, plastic, filters, etc. at the molecular level. Most customers wear the masks at least once. After all, the first thing most people do, when they get a mask, is try it on to make sure it fits properly. When they do, they inhale the poison with every breath, and every inch of skin in contact with the rest of the mask absorbs poison through the sweat glands. Even if the customer doesn’t wear the mask - he or she just keeps it in storage in the house - the poison can still take effect. The poison is very strong, and I take the liberty of poking tiny, nearly imperceptible holes in the bags I place the masks in before wrapping and packaging them. Poisonous fumes escape the bag and seep into the house, so chances are good the customer will still be poisoned to some extent. If the customer has ordered a complete hazmat suit, I hedge my bets by contaminating that too.

Once the customers have sufficient amounts of the poison in their systems, they begin to succumb to paranoia and death. Some suffer cardiac arrest and/or respiratory failure. Others are driven to commit murder-suicide due to paranoia. It’s easy for me to find obituaries, police blotters, and news articles, so it’s simple to find the fates of the majority of my customers. There was a report from a nearby town of a man who went insane and shot his family members to death before taking a fatal dose of pills and booze. There was also an incident in another city of a woman who was shot to death by police after she took a gun and wandered through the streets raving and making violent threats – a case of unintentional suicide by cop. I checked my customer list against the police blotters and news reports. Sure enough, they were both on the “special orders pile” list. Sometimes I can tell beforehand that the poison is doing its work. For instance, there was a customer who, a couple weeks after receiving his mask, requested five more masks, making all sorts of claims about why he needed them. I could tell from the bizarre claims he made that he was deep into the paranoia stage. I told him not to worry, that I would send him the new shipment of masks expedited delivery at no extra cost since he was such a good customer, and please let me know when the shipment arrived. Two days after he contacted me to let me know it had arrived, I read his obituary. They speculated that it was stress that had caused his fatal heart attack. Funny stuff.

The more people die, the more fear is generated. The more fearful and paranoid people come, the greater my sales. After the guy who ordered five additional masks had his heart attack, several of his friends and relatives ordered masks from me. This thing had them shaken, they said, and they would feel safer with something which could provide them with a little extra security, because you never know what might happen in life. I told them I understood completely, and that I would give them the exact same service I gave him. After the news reports of the woman who was shot by police, and of the man who killed his family, I searched and found the advertising offices for the newspapers in those cities. I placed an ad in each one, and after that my sales in those cities took off like a rocket. Many of the customers I gained from those three incidents have already died and more are on their way there. The cycle continues as the process constantly replicates itself. Yep, business is good. Raidra (talk) 00:50, January 11, 2015 (UTC)

This one really was a chiller. I believe it was the narrator’s indifference and lack of emotion that made the story unsettling. In my mind I kept hearing the voice of Jackal The Jackal from Far Cry 2 reading the narration. That was pretty rad.

You had said that “one line in particular” was disturbing. I’m pretty sure the entire thing is disturbing, but if I had to choose one line that really struck me, it’d be “…a case of unintentional suicide by cop.” Holy crap, Michael Brown?

I think that this one is really going to make it big on the Wiki. I’d love to re-review it when/if you do post it. It’s a very original idea, and it will surely shock and surprise readers. The only story I’ve ever read that is similar to this one would be “We Make Guns” which is set up the same way; a heartless craftsman talking about how he builds dangerous weapons while ever so vaguely giving hints about the disastrous world outside his shop.

However, that story takes place in a Post-Apocalyptic universe, and they made guns, not masks. So wow, I guess I really have never seen anything like this!

On a side note, I liked this line the best, “The other is from a guy saying he didn’t care about any special features; he just wanted a cool mask to wear to an upcoming party. That’s fine by me.”

Is that…me? I in there? That’s just…awesome.

Rating 6.9/10

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:26, January 11, 2015 (UTC)

"6.9/10"? Ye gads, how could the quality of my work have slipped so far?! Naw, I'm just kiddin'! I'm glad to hear the story was indeed a chiller. Thanks for the feedback and good review.
I don't like to brag on my stories, but I like to think I did a good job with the buildup on this one. It's interesting to compare and contrast which elements were the most effective. After I wrote the part about unintentional suicide by cop I realized, "That's going to be unsettling in light of recent events." I added it in the first place because A) it would show another way the poisoned masks are leading to insanity and death and B) sadly enough there have been real-life instances in which police officers have killed someone in the line of duty, and it turned out they had some kind of mental illness or other problem, and I decided to leave it in the story for those same reasons. However, that's not the line I was thinking of. When I was writing it, the line that struck me as the most disturbing was when the narrator talks about the man who died of a heart attack. After noting that the officials thought it was caused by a heart attack, the narrator says, "Funny stuff." Like you say, the narrator is so heartless and indifferent to the damage being done to people. You read this pasta and think, "This person has practically no soul!"
For the record, whether or not the party-goer was inspired by you, I admit that I thought of you when I wrote that part. Of course, you'd make your own, right? Raidra (talk) 02:06, January 12, 2015 (UTC)
Okay, "Masks for Sale" is up! Raidra (talk) 17:01, January 12, 2015 (UTC)

Oh, no no no, you’re stories are as good as ever! Here, let me explain. I’ve devised this chart to help decode my reviews. As you can see, the majority of Creepypasta Wiki falls between 5 and 6. You are higher than 6, therefore you are exceed the majority! How cool is that? Pretty wizard, if you ask me.


Thanks for thinking about me while writing that. I’m glad I’m leaving an impression! And yes, I thought that the “Funny stuff” line was pretty chilling, too.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:40, January 18, 2015 (UTC)

You're right, that is pretty wizard! Thanks for the helpful chart! I kinda feel bad for anyone who gets a 1 because that means that, according to your chart, their cat could have done a better job. Of course, that's because cats know not to use cliches and then expect cliche-riddled, poorly-written stories to be received as top-notch writing. In any case, I think we can hold our heads high knowing that we both are indeed pretty wizard. Raidra (talk) 01:39, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

I believe that all literature has great worth. Even the seemingly meaningless scribblings of a child writing all over a piece of paper are equal to the writings of Lovecraft and Shakespear. They are both expressions of creativity, and therefore are priceless.

You see, one piece of writing cannot appeal to everyone in the same way. Because we are all different, we all see the same piece of literature in varying ways. That’s the beauty of it.

So, perhaps, in that light, my Chart is a little harsh. My reviews are subjective; they pertain to what I alone thought of the story. I could give a 2.5/10 to a story that is rated 10/10 by someone else. I want people to see my reviews as a suggestion, not law. They’re something to learn from, something to think about.

I think that the only truly objective part of my reviews would be the Concerning Grammar section. I mean, we can all agree that bad grammar can mess up a good story, am I right?

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:34, January 24, 2015 (UTC)

I agree. If I like a story, movie, song, or whatnot, I'll give it a good review even if other people think it's terrible. If I don't like a story, I'll give it a poor review even if others are raving about what a classic it is. There's a modern art movement called Art Brut ("Raw Art") which is inspired by the work of children and the insane. It was founded on the belief that those groups of people make purer forms of art because they don't care about things like how it looks, how will society feel about this, will it make me a lot of money, etc.
I also agree about the grammar. Some people admit that they don't have great grammar skills and they're willing to accept pointers. I respect those people because they're humble. The people who get me are the ones who have bad grammar, but blow up if you give suggestions on how to improve the story. Here's a story I like to tell whenever people talk about bad writing. It was deleted shortly after being posted, but one time I came across a monster-related pasta called "The Squid-Cow", or something to that effect. It was badly-written in every way (incoherent, poor grammar, lack of punctuation, badly constructed sentences, etc.). I went to edit it to clean up the grammar and give it actual sentence structures, but when I did something went wrong with my computer. I am not kidding. It stopped responding and I had to disconnect the Internet. I thought, "Holy cow, this story was so bad it caused my computer to malfunction!" Raidra (talk) 01:39, January 25, 2015 (UTC)

Art Brut? That sounds interesting. I agree that art produced by children is of the purest nature. They draw what they want to draw, what appeals to them. The insane, in my opinion, do not produce pure art. Their minds are so shrouded in lunacy, pain and repressed memories, and their art reflects that. However, when you’re so far gone (and I mean really…really gone) that your brain reverts to an animalistic state, then a creative expression (if you are even capable of one at that point) would be pure, indeed, perhaps even more pure then that of a child. That’s just my theory, though.

The Squid-Cow? Yeah, I’ve had that happen to me; except for me it was called Shrektosity. Bored 10-year-olds will write intentionally bad stories and post them, hoping to “troll” the readers here. They are the very foundation of Trollpasta, but every now and then, one of them slips a story on to this site. I even considered revising Shrektosity, to make it suitable, but I did not. The Administrators of this site know when a story is bad, and when it’s just a gag. They’ll delete it faster then I can blink (they never sleep, I’m pretty sure they’re vampires). So, at that point, there’s no benefit in trying to spruce up the story before it’s deleted.

That’s what makes this website both a blessing, and a curse. After failing to be published on other Creepypasta sites, I realized that this site (since it is a division of Wikipedia) would allow any story to be published, I was thrilled.

“They’ll have to accept me,” I thought gleefully, and they did.

The site is wonderful in that anyone can contribute, but terrible in the fact that "anyone" also means trolls…lots and lots of trolls.

The story made your computer blow up xD that’s classic.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:34, February 3, 2015 (UTC)

RE: Je Suis Charlie

I hold the same views about politics. (I keep my views to myself.) There's nothing violating any codes/regulations that I know of by posting that message as a form of solidarity on your user page as it really isn't incendiary/inflammatory. That being said, I ask that you don't go around spamming it in messages, story comments, or forum posts. (I doubt that thought crossed your mind.) Have a good one. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 23:58, January 14, 2015 (UTC)

I shall not be spamming the message at all. Thank you kindly, and you have a good one, too.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:06, January 15, 2015 (UTC)

Re: Fan Art from Tyber Zann

Let me tell you, I was so tickled pink when I saw this that I immediately started laughing gleefully.  Those three have never looked so rad!  You even remembered to give Nate a different belt buckle!  I should soon have something for you, too.  I'll keep mum for now, but hopefully you'll like it.  In any case, thanks for the fan art!  Raidra (talk) 01:36, January 17, 2015 (UTC)

I posted three drafts of scenes on my talk page. I posted them on mine instead of yours because I've been stretching out your talk page, but if you'd rather have them here then I could move them. I hope you enjoy! Raidra (talk) 00:54, January 18, 2015 (UTC)

You’re very welcome! I’m so glad that you liked the way the picture turned out. I wish I could’ve seen your reaction, it sounded hilarious. I was afraid you’d say “Oh my gosh, what have you done to my characters?!” so I was a little nervous at first. These are your characters, after all. I actually saved your picture of them and studied it carefully, as to get every little detail right. I had fun drawing it, and I’d be happy to do some more fan art!  

I’ll go check out the drafts, but I may not be able to review them all right away. I’m just buried in work over here, Raidra.

I know that most Creepypasta members like to treat the Talk pages like email. They do “Re:” on other Talk Pages, they indent their paragraphs, too. Personally, I like to keep the entire thread of messages on one page, this way I can just scroll up to see old messages and refer to them. I also don’t like indents, because it messes up the format. So, I really don’t mind you stretching out my page; it makes me feel successful in a way. I have friends here, yay! I’ll review the drafts on your page, for convenience sake.

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:47, January 18, 2015 (UTC)

I understand, and I insist that you take as long as you need to. At this point I know that if you say you'll read something, post a review, or whatever, you'll do it whether you're able to do it that day or you have to wait two years to do it (which hasn't actually happened yet unless I'm missing something, but you know what I mean). In the past ten days or so I've received three review requests myself. I'm becoming popular!
On a semi-related note, I noticed your responses to my other posts on here, but I decided to respond to just one or two per day instead of trying to respond to all of them at the same time. I like our way of conversing on the talk pages too. You don't have to keep going back and forth; the whole conversation is there for your convenience. You don't have to wonder, "What was it I said last time?"
The fan art reminds me of when my friend Nick and I made a couple comics with each others' characters. It was a thrill and a delight for both of us. I wasn't kidding; I really did start giggling in delight when I saw your depiction of the Wacky Sub Gang. There's no rush at all, but if you're interested, I have three stories on here, "The Houseguest", "The Binding Mask", and "White Lady", with sections at the end for any budding artists on here who want to try their hand at drawing a character. I'll let you know if I think of anything else. I'm glad you enjoyed doing it! Raidra (talk) 01:00, January 21, 2015 (UTC)

Thanks so much for having such confidence in me. It’s nice to know that you believe in me, even when I’m looking at myself going “You lazy idiot, Tyber.” I’ve reviewed the drafts, at long, long last xD Thanks for waiting!

I happened to notice those review requests. I actually went and checked out that Hot Chocolate story, to see if maybe I could review it, too (I swear I’m not trying to steal your work). Then I saw how long it was, and how busy my schedule was…and how tired I was. I said “She can take care of that one,” and then fell asleep xD

Okay, so maybe I was a little jealous xD but I’m happy for you! It’s awesome, it really is.

Indeed, I’m happy with my Uber Talk Page. It’s like a Hub of commerce! And you’re right, all to often I’ll be writing and then stop and think “What the heck am I talking about? What year is it?” Although, that probably has less to do with the format errors in the Talk Page, and more to do with the format errors in my brain. Take your time with those other messages.

That sounds like fun! It makes me wonder what you’d do with my characters xD it would be pretty cool to find out. I’m really happy you liked my fan art. I will want to do more in the future, if you don’t mind. I promise I won’t mess up the characters…too much.

I’ve got a master plan for these next few months. I’m actually going to be posting a new story on Trollpasta pretty soon, so I’ll let you know when that one is up. When I snag some free time, I’ll relax and read your stories you mentioned. I’m looking forward to it!

But in the meantime, I posted a nifty blog a few days ago. It chronicles the glorious finale to my nerd rage. Come check it out : D

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:46, January 24, 2015 (UTC)

My new story

Hey Tyber! I just finished my new story and posted it on this site. It would make my day if you could review it and/or possibly tell me how to improve it as well. It's called Chat Room D and I'd love it if you could spread your writing wisdom to an amateur such as myself :)

Thanks, Natalo (talk) 08:49, January 21, 2015 (UTC)


I left a reply in the "Masks for Sale Draft" section, and then, after I went back and changed one word, something weird happened.  It added a lot of gibberish for some reason, and it wouldn't let me go back and fix it.  I don't know what happened, but I just wanted to let you know that it wasn't something I did intentionally.   My apologies, and stay wizard! Raidra (talk) 02:32, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

Yeah, I see it, too. It sems to be a formatting error involving our signatures. No worries, I'll take care of it : )

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 04:19, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

I've asked an Administrator to come help us out

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 04:25, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

I just grabbed the earlier version before the thing went belly-up. I'm not quite sure what happened. Did Raidra copy/paste something in? Or possibly use visual editor when editing? (Not even sure if you can on a talk page...) I'm not the best technical person for this, but I reverted it back to normal. (If that happens again, Raidra or you can simply go to history or click history and undo the edit. Also previewing it helps to make sure it won't make it all wonky again. Hope that helps. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 04:44, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
Thanks so much, Empy. Once again, you save the day xD
Raidra, I'll message you back on all of your messages tomorrow. It's getting late and my internet is moving too slowly. See you all in the morning!
Tyberzannisultra (talk) 05:11, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

Good morning, everybody! It does help, and I did make an edit in Visual mode. It was such a small edit that I didn't think it would matter which mode I used, but I've learned my lesson. From now on I'll only edit in Source mode, no matter how small the change is. Thanks, Empy!

Tyber, I'm looking forward to it! Raidra (talk) 13:07, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

Blarg, I hate mornings. There’s always this big, satany, fiery ball in the sky that’s constantly beaming down on me. It kills me, it really does xD

Anyway, I’m glad to be back. It’s time to get to work!


Tyberzannisultra (talk) 00:01, January 24, 2015 (UTC)

There's a Far Side cartoon claiming that in some state (I don't feel like searching through my Far Side books right now) there actually is a place where the sun doesn't shine. It shows a guy holding a TV and explaining to the guy at the information booth (or whatever it is), "Yeah, I was told to stick this here." Raidra (talk) 01:52, January 24, 2015 (UTC)
It took me 7 days to get that joke -_- but it's a good one, all the same xD
Tyberzannisultra (talk) 01:06, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
Oh, there were Far Side jokes I didn't understand for years (usually because I didn't get the references and allusions), so don't feel bad! ;-) I also have a Far Side collection with a chapter of cartoons that people didn't get for one reason or another. There was one that people in a certain city didn't understand because the newspaper had cropped out the part of the cartoon providing the punchline! This man in a factory was telling someone about the chaotic incidents happening that day and concluded, "Everything's gone, well, you know what." A sign on the factory revealed it was a haywire plant (There's the expression "Everything's gone haywire."). However, the newspaper cropped out the sign, leaving many people confused about what was supposed to be so funny about that day's cartoon. Raidra (talk) 00:50, February 6, 2015 (UTC)

Status Report--Re

Thank you so much for telling me this latest on the narration progress. I really appreciate the hard work and effort that's going into these. They would have to take a while to perfect because of the rather dramatic story lines.

Also thank you so much for sending me the link. I'm going to have to check out that movie.

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 05:40, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

You're very welcome. I'm having a lot of fun working on this. There have been a few Bloopers and other shenanigans going on during production. Enjoy the channel. It isn't much, but it's a start!

Tyberzannisultra (talk) 23:56, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

Status Report--Re 2

There must be a lot of bloopers and gremlins going on.

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 03:52, January 30, 2015 (UTC)

Updated Status Report--Re 2

That's really good to hear. I can hardly wait to see the finished work. Well, what about "M.M. Pratt's 'Doorway to Darkness' - Creepypasta Narration?"

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 04:38, January 30, 2015 (UTC)

This was a Triumpth--RE

Many thanks to you and the narrator James Jones for this brilliant presentation. I'm really pleased at how it turned out. The music fit quite perfectly with this work and the double voices of the Lontaqas made them even more ominous. I just added the video to the story so hopefully it will get more views. I'll also put it up in my Facebook site. I'm wondering how many hours of labor it took altogether for this work to be completed?

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 18:20, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

I think your suggestion of starting a Creepypasta Wiki Blog featuring this video is a good idea. It would certainly help gain more views. So far my Facebook feature got the attention of my sister and my aunt in Japan. --Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 03:34, February 3, 2015 (UTC)

My new story

Hi there! Natalo again :)

It'd mean the world to me if you could come and check out my newest story. The link is here . I'd love your opinion! I think it's the best twist I've ever done, but I guess you can decide once you give it a read :) Thanks again,

Natalo (talk) 08:54, February 5, 2015 (UTC)

You can submit it however, since it does violate the word limit 1 point will be deducted from the score.

Review Request

Saw a couple of your reviews and you come off as tough but fair (love the chart by the way.)  Was hoping you could take a look at any or all of mine and give some honest constructive criticism.  Appreciate anything and everything...thanks in advance!

Short Stories:

The Wicker House




The Soldier: Part 1

Shadowswimmer77 (talk) 00:35, February 16, 2015 (UTC)

RE: You're the best around..

Thank you so much! I checked out that post and I was at first like 'what, they copied me!' I'd never seen it before! But yeah, I don't mind. I'm glad that you got over that cold! I gues Raidra's pie helped haha! Yes, I've been following 'Mama Was Right' very closely, hoping it gets more attention! It deserves it. Thanks for the song link hahaha :) have a good one!

Natalo (talk) 06:04, February 17, 2015 (UTC)

Freestyle Challenge Proposition

Hello Tyberzannisultra! I'm Whitix.

I don't know if you have been following the whole challenge thread, but we've been placed in the same finalist group. I've copied this message to the other people in our group (Hoping it doesn't count as spam), with the hopes of striking a sort of "coalition" agreement.

You see, the main the prize I see from this contest is the chance to promote one's own work for others to see. I then realized that I only have three stories and only one that I really want others to see. So I thought that we could all benefit from this contest. I'm proposing that whoever wins the contest from our group forego the opportunity to promote all their work, in place of giving every group member a chance to promote theirs too. Yes, the winner will still get bragging rights and could promote maybe two stories while the other group members submit their best story, perhaps? That way we'd all get increased coverage.

I totally get it if you're not on board; I completely understand if you want to keep a competitive atmosphere (Although I still think we could keep one. This just provides a little "insurance").

Of course, I have no idea if the judges would be okay with this. I wanted to get the groups consensus before asking them. If you agree, disagree, or have any suggestions, please let me know! Whitix (talk) 08:34, February 17, 2015 (UTC)


Your uncertainty is justified; after looking over the main post, I realize that in no place did it ever say the winners would have a spotlight of sorts. However, this page, does elaborate on it a bit (Near the bottom of the page).

I'll quote a bit of the conversation here in case you don't want to read through all of it:

Underscorre: "...We could have another staff blog with a list of the winners, as well as a bit of promotional text from each winner explaining their other pastas.

Staff blogs are the first thing many people see when they come to the site, so it would be a lot of exposure for the winners, especially if they are allowed to promote not just the winning, but many of their pastas."

So this may not be a done deal, in which case, my proposition isn't as useful as it could be. However, if they do go through with this and create a little blog of sorts, I think it'd be an excellent way for everyone to get a bit more publicity.

And I still have no idea if the judges would be okay with all of us spotlighting our stories. I wanted to see if the group was on board with it and see who our judge was in the first place (Looks to be Blacknumber1).

I hope that brings a bit more clarification. Think it over a bit. Whitix (talk) 02:05, February 19, 2015 (UTC)

Your Subject for the Freestyle Finals!

Congratulations on getting in to the finals of the freestyle pasta challenge! Here's your subject:

Your own Revenge stroy and characters from the world of THE CROW

You have until this time tomorrow to submit your pasta! Place the template Freestyle finals at the top of your pasta to mark it as part of the contest. Best of luck!

Blacknumber1 (talk) 23:26, February 19, 2015 (UTC)


In case you didn't notice, you achieved the highest score in your group, meaning you're one of our 6 winners. We're planning to make a staff blog announcing the winners in which each winner will be able to write a small bio promoting their other work. Staff blogs are the first thing many people see when they come to the site, so this will be a significant amount of exposure for your work. If you could leave me a message with a short description of you & your other works, I would greatly appreciate it. Regards, Underscorre (talk) 22:34, February 23, 2015 (UTC)

Do you mind if I put the pasta that one the thing just above it? I'm doing this for all the entrants, not just you, and I don't want to appear to be advertising your stuff if you don't want me to. Underscorre (talk) 21:02, February 24, 2015 (UTC)


Greetings.  I read your pastas, nice: solid work.  I've also noticed some of your reviews and I must say that they were very informative and detailed.  I would love to get one from you.  If you can find the time would you read The Long List?  If you like it go to my page and read some of the others, there aren't that many.  Thanks so much for your time Tyberzannisultra.  HumboldtLycanthrope (talk) 23:55, February 23, 2015 (UTC)

Oh, look, you wrote that story, too.  I somehow missed that that was you.  I was really impressed with that one.  It seems like the freestyle is really bringing out the best in us all.  Looks like we will be going  head to head soon.  That should be fun.  I wonder what they are planning on giving us?  HumboldtLycanthrope (talk) 23:59, February 23, 2015 (UTC) 

2015 Review Request

Hello? I was just wondering, if you have the time, you can possibly review this other story that's been sitting in Writer's Workshop. I don't know if I should follow this other guy's advice and make changes or leave it as it is. I'm currently writing a new version I might put up under the old version>

Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 19:57, February 24, 2015 (UTC)


Here 'tis

No problemo! Here 'tis. I hope you like it! I was going to read your story but I'm afraid I have never read/watched/encountered 'The Crow', so I wasn't sure if I'd have any idea what the heck was going on. I'm sure it's just fabulous like all of your other work though!

P.S. Do you have any idea how I could create a creepy story which revolves around the topic 'Family'? Just wondering...

Natalo (talk) 23:00, February 27, 2015 (UTC)


I saw you won your division in the contest! YAY! :-D ~tries to pop champagne cork, struggles, gets tired, and stares at bottle awkwardly for a few moments~ YAY!

By the way, I responded to your latest post on my talk page. Raidra (talk) 00:47, February 27, 2015 (UTC)

Hmm, let me try. ~tries to open bottle cleanly and cork pops out violently before comically ricocheting off several knickknacks and kitchen furnishings~ Hey, you're right!
In any case, thank you, and right back atcha! To friendship and to writing! Raidra (talk) 04:48, February 28, 2015 (UTC)


Hey, if you're not too busy, would you mind checking this story out? It's the first trollpasta I've written! I really loved yours, so I just wanted to give you the chance to check mine out! 

Natalo (talk) 22:59, February 27, 2015 (UTC)

Thank you so much!

Thank you so much for the reviews and your ideas for that topic! You see, I made a discussion asking what matters most to people, and then decided I would write a creepy story. There's nothing worse than having something that matters so much to you completely fall apart, I reckon. Anyway, better get writing! 

P.S. Words cannot describe how greatful I am to have found your stories on this site! You are definitely way up in my top 3 favourite writers on this website!

Natalo (talk) 03:29, March 1, 2015 (UTC)


Hey there Tyber, it's me again! I'm sorry for all the incessant badgering I give you, but I'd really love it if you checked out my latest story! You know, it's the one I was trying to write about Family? Well, it's done and I'd love your honest opinion! You can find it here! Thanks again,

Natalo (talk) 11:33, March 3, 2015 (UTC)


I have just written the sweetest little fairytale.  It is just charming.  Enjoy hehehe Rumplestilskin HumboldtLycanthrope (talk) 22:34, March 5, 2015 (UTC)

Review Request

I had just completed The Old Gardner Place on the Writer's Workshop and I would very much like your honest opinion on it, if you have the time.

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 05:55, March 8, 2015 (UTC)

The Banshee of Connacht

Happy St. Patrick’s Day! This is a short story I submitted some time ago. It was eventually deleted, but it was on the site for a few months, if I recall correctly. I’m thinking about adding it to Trollpasta. I hope you like it!

The Banshee of Connacht

This humorous story is dedicated to my late father (I encourage everyone to get colonoscopies and other check-ups) who had an interesting sense of humor.

The old man set down his glass. “I was in the peat bog earlier. I saw it.”

His friend gaped. “You mean…”

“Yes. The Banshee of Connacht. She looked just like they say she does. She had a ragged dress, long, tangled locks of green hair, and bloodshot eyes. I was behind a bush gathering some peat when I saw her approach. I knelt down and watched her. She came close enough for me to get a good look at her. Suddenly she screamed and fled.”

“She sensed some poor bloke about to die,” offered the friend sadly.

The old man slowly shook his head. “No, that wasn’t it.”


He grinned. “I was close enough to see her, remember? I saw a dark spot suddenly develop on her dress.”

The two laughed and the friend agreed, “Yes, I imagine I’d scream too if I peed myself in a cold, windy peat bog!” Raidra (talk) 02:22, March 17, 2015 (UTC)

I did it!

This is just to let you know that tonight I earned the Special Containment Perfectionist (200 consecutive days) badge! :-D Raidra (talk) 00:33, March 26, 2015 (UTC)

Loser League roster

Hello! In case you haven't seen it yet, I left you a response on my talk page (though it's okay if you don't post a response. I know you're working on a lot of things right now). Here's something for you- the members of the Loser League! I'll just leave two or three at a time until I've posted the descriptions for all fifteen members (Seahorse Man, Crafty Lass, The Lime Loser, Adept, Goblin Robin, Yo-Yo Girl, The Bouncy Brawler, Porpoise, Mermaid, S.N. Fever, Bob Hairy, Flatgirl, Kehko the Superpower Teletubby, The Gum-Chewing Vampiress, and Umbriago). I'll go a little out of order by starting with The Bouncy Brawler and S.N. Fever.

The Bouncy Brawler

Secret identity- Nadia Silp

Birthplace- Oregon

Occupation- bouncer

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- bounciness, super-skin, combat skill, noise resistance, intelligence

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Personality- The Bouncy Brawler has a tough but quiet personality and a good heart. She is relentless in battle. She will retreat if she has to, but won’t give up until her opponent is vanquished. She showed her generosity by contributing her ample resources to the Loser League without hesitation. Her only regret came when she worried that she may have made Yo-Yo Girl, who was in a lower financial bracket, feel small by making such a large donation. She went on to reassure her teammate, saying that any amount she could contribute would be sufficient. Bouncy Brawler is apparently good at seeing a person’s true character as she could tell at first sight that there was more to S.N. Fever than met the eye. She is offended by the stereotype of Russians as evil, drunken Communists. She calls herself a “Christian Communist” because she follows the principles expressed in the Book of Acts (especially Chapters 2-5), but she is vehemently against conventional Communism due to the extreme cruelty and intolerance displayed by its followers throughout history. She is good friends with Yo-Yo Girl.

Appearance- The Bouncy Brawler is a female Caucasian human with light brown hair which she wears in a long braid held with a light blue ponytail holder. Her costume consists of a light blue shirt, a silvery blue skirt, a blue mask, fingerless gloves, and boots, and a gold belt.

Entry- Nadia Silp was working in a chemical plant when there was an accident and she was soaked in chemicals. The chemicals made her body like hard rubber, allowing her to bounce off walls easily and without harm. Nadia wanted to use her powers to fight crime and became the vigilante known as The Bouncy Brawler. The Loser League heard about her and sent The Lime Loser and Yo-Yo Girl to the bar where she worked as a bouncer to ask her to join. Never one to turn down an opportunity to sock it to the bad guys, The Bouncy Brawler accepted the offer. When S.N. Fever came to join, Brawler quickly became attached to him. They began dating shortly afterward, and they often assist each other in their battles for justice. The Bouncy Brawler is feared by many criminals because of her relentlessness in putting a stop to their activities.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- The Bouncy Brawler’s body is like hard rubber. This makes her skin difficult to penetrate and allows her to bounce like a rubber ball. She is an excellent fighter and is immune to the effects of noise. She is quite smart and is good at mixing chemicals.

Weaknesses- The Bouncy Brawler is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.). Her mask has filters to protect against poison gas, so she can only be gassed if she’s not wearing her mask.


  • The Bouncy Brawler is not a parody of any particular character, though her powers are similar to those of Bouncing Boy from the Legion of Super-Heroes of DC Comics. I thought it would be neat to have a tough female scrapper bouncing around everywhere. I also decided to make her Russian-American, and that it would be funny to make her a bouncer.
  • I gave her the first name “Nadia” because it sounded Russian. Her last name, “Silp”, is a reference to “Silly Putty”.
  • The Bouncy Brawler’s braid is made by drawing two alternating wavy lines.

S.N. Fever

Secret identity- None

Birthplace- New York

Occupation- dance instructor

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- agility, endurance, combat skill, noise resistance

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Personality- S.N. Fever has an eager, happy, and energetic personality. He is fun-loving, but takes his duties seriously, and is tough on drug dealers and anyone else who would exploit others. He has a kind heart and the ability to listen, earning him trust and admiration. He is good friends with Bob Hairy.

Appearance- S.N. Fever is a male Caucasian human with light brown hair with two tufts. He wears a white leisure suit with a black shirt, belt, and shoes.

Entry- Stanley Nigel Fever seems like something from out of a 70s disco movie, but his dancing keeps him in great shape. When he heard about the Loser League, he was eager to join. He convinced his friend Bob Hairy to apply for membership as well. When the two went to join the Loser League, The Bouncy Brawler quickly became attached to Fever. They began dating shortly afterward, and they often assist each other in their battles for justice. Fever is happy and energetic, but he’s serious about fighting crime. He is especially tough on drug dealers who target distressed youth. His kindness and ability to listen has helped many people.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- S.N. Fever is agile and has a great degree of endurance. He is a good fighter and is immune to the effects of noise.

Weaknesses- S.N. Fever is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


  • S.N. Fever was named after the movie which inspired him, Saturday Night Fever. I saw the movie for sale in a store one day, read the description on the back of the box, and decided it would be funny to have a disco-related hero in the Loser League. Later on I decided to stress that he was anti-drugs/anti-dealers because of the stereotype that people involved with the dance/club scene are all druggies.
  • S.N. Fever was originally going to have a disco-themed arch-enemy named The Disco Dictator, but luckily I realized just how bad an idea that was and rejected him.

Raidra (talk) 02:34, April 7, 2015 (UTC)

Seahorse Man

Secret identity- Jor Horren (It’s a family name)

Birthplace- Florida

Occupation- fisher

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- swimming ability, diving ability, land walking, super-skin

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Catchphrases and Mottos- Losers to action! (This is actually the catchphrase of the entire Loser League)

Hobbies- collecting bottles of sand

Personality- Seahorse Man is generally a happy, easygoing figure, though he gets irritated if someone laughs at him derisively. Despite his lack of power, he is brave and determined. His enthusiasm encourages his teammates and he has surprisingly good leadership skills. He is good friends with Crafty Lass, Porpoise, and Mermaid.

Appearance- Seahorse Man is a seahorse man. He is short (about 5 ft) with light brown skin with plates, spikes topping his head and framing his face, a row of well-spaced spikes running down his back from the top of his neck to near the tip of his tail, a long, slender snout, solid black eyes on the sides of his head, muscular arms, and bandy legs. Each of his hands has three fingers and a thumb while each foot has a rounded tip. When walking he normally carries his curving, tapering tail between his legs, but he can stand on his tail and extend it, making him appear taller. His costume consists of blue underwear.

Entry- Jor Horren is the leader and co-founder of the Loser League. One day, he was discussing crime in the area with his best friend, Carol Anderson. The two decided to form their own crime-fighting team. The seahorse man dubbed himself “Seahorse Man” and Carol became Crafty Lass. They quickly recruited a team of crime-fighting misfits, and the Loser League was formed. Seahorse Man may not be the most powerful or skilled hero, but he is brave and determined to fight injustice and conquer crime. His leadership skills make him respected by all the Loser Leaguers.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Seahorse Man is a good swimmer and diver and can walk on land. He also has skin which is difficult to penetrate, serving as a kind of armor. His tail is quite strong and can be used to grasp objects. Seahorse Man can also balance on it and extend it, making him taller.

Weaknesses- Seahorse Man gets sick if he stays out of water too long. He’s not the strongest hero, but this doesn’t stop him.


  • I was inspired to create Seahorse Man after seeing a dried-up seahorse on a shelf near my desk in 8th grade science class. I made a drawing with a funny description and showed it to Nick Vorlage. We both liked it and I later decided to do something more with him. This eventually led to the concept of the Loser League. It would seem like the Loser League was inspired by the Legion of Substitute Heroes from DC Comics, but I actually came up with the idea before I’d heard of them.

Crafty Lass

Secret identity- Carol Anderson

Birthplace- Indiana

Occupation- hobby shop owner

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- intelligence, utility belt, weapons expertise

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Personality- Crafty Lass is level-headed and resourceful, even in tense situations. She is a skilled leader and her kind, composed, take-charge personality makes her highly respected by her teammates. She takes pride in her business and gets irritated if someone belittles it. She is good friends with Seahorse Man.

Appearance- Crafty Lass is a female Caucasian human with long, wavy, brown hair. Her costume consists of a light blue shirt with gold cuffs and collar, a light brown skirt, a brown utility belt, gray gloves, white shoes, and a red violet, green, and purple striped mask with gold trim.

Entry- Crafty Lass is the best friend of Jor Horren and co-founder of the Loser League. She and Jor were in her craft shop discussing crime in the area when they decided to form their own crime-fighting team. Jor became Seahorse Man and Carol dubbed herself “Crafty Lass”. They quickly recruited a team of crime-fighting misfits, and the Loser League was formed. Crafty Lass is respected for her ability to keep a cool head in a crisis and for her ability to use her intelligence and skill to create needed items out of whatever she has on hand.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Crafty Lass is smart and knows how to make a weapon out of anything. She has a utility belt full of supplies she uses to make weapons and any other needed items.

Weaknesses- Crafty Lass is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


  • My Mom and I used to watch a craft show on HGTV (Home and Garden Television) called The Carol Duvall Show. Some of the crafts were made from unusual items. For instance, they once showed how to make brooches out of junk CDs. I joked that it would be interesting to have MacGuyver on Carol Duvall. “Today on our show we have Angus MacGuyver! What do you have for us today?” “Well, I have a sock monkey I made out of some wood and fabric that I found in someone’s attic, some string, and some stuff that came out of a tree when I stuck my knife into it.” That line of thinking led to Crafty Lass. I named Crafty Lass “Carol Anderson” after Carol Duvall and Richard Dean Anderson, who played MacGuyver.

The Lime Loser

Secret identity- Alex Rayner

Birthplace- Nevada

Occupation- test pilot

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- power ring, mechanical ability, agility, piloting

Status- member of the Loser League, member of the Lantern Corps, member of Shophetim

First appearance- KK#62

Personality- The Lime Loser has a positive, outgoing, and enthusiastic personality. Like Green Beam, he is honest and brave with the desire to use his powers for good. He knows he isn’t the most powerful hero, but he doesn’t let this dampen his enthusiasm. He doesn’t hesitate to help those in need, as evidenced by him assisting Cherry Smasher, Lemon Yellow, and Blue-sky without prejudice or thought of how they could reward him. He is also humble as he treats his teammates like friends and equals despite easily being the most powerful member of the team. He often addresses men as “mister” and women as “m’lady”.

Appearance- The Lime Loser is a male Caucasian human with brown hair with three tufts. His costume is green with a green mask and yellow green belt, gloves, and boots. His chest insignia is a white circle with a green lime, and his belt has a small green lime design for its buckle.

Entry- The Praseodyman known as Guardian created the power rings worn by 78 of the members of the Lantern Corps. The other four members wear power rings created by the Praseodyman known as Cherry Smasher. However, these power rings weren’t as powerful, and tended to run out of power more often. The yellow ring was given to Lemon Yellow and the blue ring was given to Blue-sky. Cherry Smasher kept the red ring for himself and kept the green ring to give to whoever he felt was worthy. One night, the spaceship that Cherry Smasher, Lemon Yellow, and Blue-sky were riding in broke down in the Nevada desert. Alex Rayner happened upon them and fixed their ship for them. As Alex talked with them, Cherry Smasher saw that he was honest and brave with the desire to do good. Because of this, he let Alex have the green ring. Alex dubbed himself “The Lime Loser” and became a vigilante. He happened to be in Florida when he heard about the Loser League, which he quickly joined. Seahorse Man and Crafty Lass were honored to have a crime-fighter with such experience and enthusiasm on their team. The Lime Loser is the most powerful member of the Loser League, but treats the other members as friends and equals.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- The Lime Loser’s main weapon is his power ring, a ring which is activated by willpower and gives him the ability to create green energy objects and animals, shoot green energy blasts, create force-fields, fly at super-speed, teleport, levitate, become invisible, change size, hypnotize people and computers, transform matter, and merge with other beings. He is an excellent mechanic and pilot and is very agile.

Weaknesses- The Lime Loser’s power ring is ineffective against the color yellow. His power ring isn’t as powerful as the normal power ring and tends to run out of power more often.


  • The Lime Loser is a parody of Green Lantern (Hal Jordan) from DC Comics. I thought an inferior version of Green Lantern would be a perfect fit for the Loser League.
  • The name “Alex Rayner” comes from Green Lantern Kyle Rayner and his murdered girlfriend, Alexandra DeWitt
  • The Lime Loser was going to have a girlfriend named Pennynose, a young woman who decided to affix a penny to her nose because it looked pretty there. At the time I was trying to come up with really weird characters, and Pennynose came about after I balanced a coin on my nose one day to entertain myself. Her father would’ve been a criminal named Quarternose and her jealous ex-boyfriend would’ve been named Dimenose. I went on to reject the whole coin-nosed family, and I don’t think I need to explain why.

Raidra (talk) 12:15, April 8, 2015 (UTC)


Secret identity- None

Birthplace- Kenya

Occupation- aircraft mechanic

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- intelligence, strength, mechanical ability, piloting, agility

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- WT#39

Hobbies- collecting rocks

Personality- Adept is known for his wisdom, integrity, and desire to help the cause of justice. He is usually calm and level-headed, though he sometimes has fits of temper. He prefers to use guerilla tactics (no pun intended) or intimidate opponents into backing off rather than fight, but if forced into physical combat, he prefers to finish the fight quickly with as few punches and bites as possible. He is a good friend and is admired for his kind heart and sage advice. He is offended by the stereotype of the gorilla as a vicious, mindless monster. He is good friends with Goblin Robin.

Appearance- Adept is a male gorilla. He has black fur except on his gray face, chest, abdomen, hands, and feet. He has a pointed crest on the top of his head, a brow which often gives him a stern look, a human-like nose and mouth, canine teeth which are only seen when he bares them, and eyes with dark red sclera. He usually walks on all fours, but can also walk on two legs like a human. Each of his human-like hands has three fingers and a thumb while each foot has three toes at the front and a curved toe on the back of the heel. He wears a dark blue belt.

Entry- Adept is a super-intelligent gorilla with a desire to help the cause of justice. After learning how to read, fly a plane, and fix machines, he began to travel the world, doing good wherever he could. On one occasion he met Goblin Robin, and the two have been partners in crime-fighting ever since. During the second Iraq war, Tangerine Warrior went to destroy some enemy vehicles and found the two busily causing destruction. Sometime after this, Adept and Goblin Robin traveled to Florida, where they heard of the Loser League and joined the misfit group. Adept does his best to use his skills to help the cause of justice. He is respected for his wisdom and integrity.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Adept is highly intelligent and is an excellent mechanic and pilot. He also possesses great strength and agility.

Weaknesses- Adept is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.). He gets sick if he’s exposed to extremely cold temperatures.


  • Adept was created in response to the evil/vicious gorilla stereotype so often seen in pop culture. I was originally going to introduce another gorilla character as an arch-enemy, but introducing a villainous gorilla would have been reinforcing the same stereotype I was trying to dispel.
  • I wanted a name that referenced how intelligent and skilled the character was, so I consulted the thesaurus. I found the word “adept” and realized it was perfect.

Goblin Robin

Secret identity- None

Birthplace- Rhode Island

Occupation- repossessor

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- intelligence, mechanical ability, piloting, chemical genius, stealth, agility, animal morph, nightmare, noise resistance, electrical invulnerability, digging, fire ball

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- WT#39

Hobbies- operating crystal radio/playing with blocks

Personality- Goblin Robin has a mischievous, fun-loving personality, but takes his duties seriously. Like Suggestion, he has a cutting sense of humor and enjoys playing with his opponents, but is never cruel. He enjoys battling injustice, something which gives his life purpose. At one time he felt his life had no purpose, which in turn led to his drug problem. He was reluctant to share his history of drug use with the Loser League thinking they’d hold it against him, but Seahorse Man reassured him and convinced him not to keep it a secret. Goblin Robin is good friends with Adept, who along with his other teammates provides him with the friendship and support he needs. He also shares Adept’s fondness for guerilla tactics. Despite his roguish ways, Goblin Robin is also compassionate with a warm heart, as seen when he gave support to The Chain-Smoking Vampiress (who would become his girlfriend and teammate, The Gum-Chewing Vampiress).

Appearance- Goblin Robin is a male goblin. He is between 5’ and 5’6” with red violet skin, curved, pointed ears, a snout, eyes with dark yellow sclera, and a slender tail which curves up into a slightly S-like shape and tapers to a pointed tip . Each of his hands has three curved, clawed fingers and a curved, clawed thumb while each foot has three curved, clawed toes at the front and a curved, clawed toe on the back of the heel. He wears an orange belt.

Entry- Goblin Robin was blessed with great power, but had no purpose in life. This led to an unspecified drug problem which he was fortunately able to overcome. He discovered that he enjoyed battling injustice, and so the mischievous creature began traveling the world and battling injustice wherever he could. On one occasion he met Adept the gorilla. Goblin Robin found needed friendship and support in Adept, who was determined to fight injustice like he was. The two have been partners in crime-fighting ever since. During the second Iraq war, Tangerine Warrior went to destroy enemy vehicles and found the two busily causing destruction. Sometime after this, Adept and Goblin Robin traveled to Florida, where they heard of the Loser League and joined the misfit group. Goblin Robin later helped The Chain-Smoking Vampiress quit her smoking habit. The two grew close, and after she reformed and became The Gum-Chewing Vampiress, they began dating. Goblin Robin uses his great power and penchant for mischief to vex criminals and the corrupt, giving them headaches and nightmares.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Goblin Robin is intelligent and is a chemical genius. He is a good mechanic and pilot (although people are generally reluctant to let him fly a plane). He has great stealth and agility. He can transform into any animal and give sleeping people nightmares. He is immune to the effects of noise and electricity. He is very good at digging and can shoot fire balls from his hands.

Weaknesses- Goblin Robin is allergic to iron and silver. Because he’s a recovering drug addict, he has to take care if he has to take medicine.


  • Goblin Robin was created when I decided it would be interesting to put a mischievous character into the Loser League. I had read books about fantastic creatures, such as the excellent works by Michael Berenstein, The Creature Catalog and The Troll Book, so it made sense to make the character a goblin. Goblins have been said to have various mischief-making abilities and be related to the elements of earth and fire, so I incorporated that into his superpowers.
  • “Goblin Robin” is another term for “hobgoblin”.
  • I can imagine Goblin Robin’s voice sounding like The Green Goblin’s in the 1990s Spider-Man cartoon, but higher pitched.
  • I’ve decided not to specify what drugs Goblin Robin became addicted to, though I will hint at one by noting that goblins are said to love mushrooms.

Raidra (talk) 17:05, April 9, 2015 (UTC)

Yo-Yo Girl

Secret identity- Gilda Garner

Birthplace- Florida

Occupation- typist/street performer

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- yo-yo expertise, yo-yo pouch, intelligence

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Hobbies- collecting masks/working puzzles

Personality- Yo-Yo Girl has a friendly but quiet personality. She has displayed both determination and ingenuity, creating unique yo-yos and continuing to combat Shawn Phlegm’s thugs despite being shot. She works hard and is irritated when someone demeans her professions. She used to feel sensitive about her low income status, but The Bouncy Brawler and her other teammates gave her support and encouragement. The fact that she was willing to do all she could to help and support her team despite her financial status shows a generous heart and selfless spirit. She now has a greater financial status and is still just as kind-hearted. She is good friends with Bouncy Brawler.

Appearance- Yo-Yo Girl is a female Caucasian human with wavy blond hair. Her costume consists of a white shirt with a blue and orange collar and white and yellow cuffs, a brown skirt, a yellow green and red violet belt with a gray yo-yo pouch, and white shoes.

Entry- When Gilda Garner finishes her typist job for the day, she changes into Yo-Yo Girl, takes to the streets, and dazzles the crowd with her mad yo-yo skills. She heard about the Loser League and, wanting to fight crime, gathered her yo-yos and went to join. The league was impressed with her skill, determination, and ingenuity and gladly welcomed her. Yo-Yo Girl uses her mind and yo-yos to combat injustice wherever she finds it.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Yo-Yo Girl is smart and has great skill in using yo-yos. She has a pouch with various yo-yos. Some of these are special yo-yos, such as flash bomb yo-yos.

Weaknesses- Yo-Yo Girl is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


  • Yo-Yo Girl is not a parody of any particular character, but she is in the vein of other “gimmick” characters, such as Green Arrow, The Golden Glider, and The Top (all from DC Comics). I got the idea after finding my old yo-yo and watching segments about yo-yo tournaments.
  • The name “Garner” is from actress Jennifer Garner.

Porpoise and Mermaid

Secret identities- Porpoise: Oca (Sea). Mermaid: Quan (Rain)

Birthplace- The Planet of the Gargoyles

Occupations- fisher/gatherers

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- swimming ability, diving ability, water blast, turning to stone, breath holding, space invulnerability

Status- members of the Loser League, members of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Hobbies- Porpoise: playing with balls. Mermaid: collecting shells

Personalities- Porpoise and Mermaid, like their dolphin brethren, are friendly and protective of others. Due to their racial background, they are open to mixed relationships. They are good friends with Seahorse Man, who is their roommate in the Lair of Losers.

Appearance- Porpoise is a male aquagoyle, a creature which is half gargoyle and half dolphin. He has turquoise skin, a spiraled, light gray horn, ears with three points, a crooked beak with tusks jutting from the jaw, legs which bend backward, and a slender, dolphin-like tail which curves up. His bat-like wings have light green membranes. Each of his hands has three curved, white claws serving as fingers while each foot has three curved, clawed toes with light green webbing between them. Mermaid is a female aquagoyle with light green skin, long, blond hair, ears with three points, a crooked beak with tusks jutting from the jaw, legs which bend backward, and a slender, dolphin-like tail which curves up. Her bat-like wings have turquoise membranes. Each of her hands has three curved, white claws serving as fingers while each foot has three curved, clawed toes with turquoise webbing between them. Neither one wears a costume.

Entry- Porpoise and Mermaid are brother and sister aquagoyles, half gargoyle, half dolphin. They are also friends of Seahorse Man. Realizing that the Loser League could use more aquatic members, he asked them to join. They gladly accepted, and they now help to fight evil. They are related by marriage to Garigel and Drag On, the gargoyle assistants of Lord Q-Bert.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Porpoise and Mermaid are excellent swimmers and divers who can hold their breath for long periods of time. They can shoot blasts of water from their mouths, turn to stone at will, and fly through space.

Weaknesses- Porpoise and Mermaid get sick if they get dehydrated. If one or both of their wings are injured, they cannot fly.


  • Porpoise and Mermaid were created for another endeavor and later incorporated into the Karaverse. They were always relatives of Garigel and Drag On.

Bob Hairy

Secret identity- None

Birthplace- North Carolina

Occupation- industrial machinery repairman

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- mechanical ability, piloting, strength, agility, combat skill

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Personality- Bob Hairy has the reputation of being an oddball. He craves action and desires to help his country and community. He is generally optimistic as he was undaunted after being turned away as a special agent. For some reason, he was hesitant to apply for membership in the Loser League until his good friend, S.N. Fever, convinced him to do so. He now has a greater sense of fulfillment.

Appearance- Bob Hairy is a male Caucasian human with brown hair with three tufts. He also has hairy arms and legs. He wears a yellow, short-sleeved top, blue gray shorts, and a silver belt and boots. For some unknown reason, he wears two eye patches, neither of which he needs.

Entry- Bob Hairy wanted to be a special agent, but he was considered an oddball and didn’t have all the necessary skills. Undaunted, he became an industrial machinery repairman and repaired machinery for military factories, serving his country in a different way. When his friend S.N. Fever told him they should join the Loser League, Hairy was hesitant. Fever managed to convince him, however, and the two went to apply for membership together. The Loser League realized what a benefit Hairy’s skills would be and accepted him. Hairy’s membership keeps all his skills sharp, provides him with the action he craves, and allows him to fight evil in a more direct way.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Bob Hairy is a skilled mechanic and pilot. He is strong, agile, and a good fighter. It has not been explained how he can see while wearing an eye patch over each eye.

Weaknesses- Bob Hairy is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


  • Shortly after I’d conceived of Coe Rage but years before I introduced him, I mentioned to my friend Nick that I’d created a rip-off of Nick Fury. Out of nowhere, Nick jokingly suggested, “You can call him ‘Bob Hairy’!” I burst out laughing. Later on, I thought, “Well, why not make a Nick Fury rip-off named Bob Hairy? I can make him part of the Loser League.” That’s how the character came to be.
  • Though it’s only been implied in the comics, I can imagine Bob Hairy having some kind of super-sight which enables him to see through his eye patches like we see through sunglasses.

Raidra (talk) 01:58, April 10, 2015 (UTC)


Secret identity- Falene Taylor

Birthplace- Georgia

Occupation- forester

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- agility, sonic flute attack

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Personality- Flatgirl loves nature, feeling that it’s a Christian’s duty to enjoy, preserve, and protect it. She also hates crime and corruption because of their negative effects on people and society. These viewpoints led to her becoming a mercenary for good and later a member of the Loser League. She is determined to stand her ground even when greatly outnumbered.

Appearance- Flatgirl is a female Caucasian human with long black hair. Her costume is a light brown dress with a gold belt and brown boots with gold tops.

Entry- Flatgirl loves nature and hates crime and corruption. She began moonlighting as a mercenary for the side of good, getting paid to use her sonic flute attack to subdue criminals. Hoping to eliminate Flatgirl and his new enemies at the same time, Shawn Phlegm hired her to capture the Loser League. However, she quickly found out that her sonic flute attack had no effect on Goblin Robin, S.N. Fever, and The Bouncy Brawler. The Bouncy Brawler defeated her, and the Loser Leaguers were able to explain that they were on the side of good. Angered at being lied to by Shawn, she accepted the Loser League’s offer to quit being a mercenary and join the group. Since then, she has assisted them in their quests to battle crime.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Flatgirl is agile and carries a flute which she uses to create sonic attacks.

Weaknesses- Flatgirl is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


  • The name “Flatgirl” is a parody of the name “Batgirl”, but other than that Flatgirl is in no way related to the DC Comics heroines bearing that name. I used to claim that I was Flatgirl because I had a wooden flute (a souvenir from a place in Ohio called Sunwatch Indian Village) that I didn’t know how to play. This is also why Flatgirl is armed with a wooden flute. The name “Falene” is from Bambi.

Kehko the Superpower Teletubby

Secret identity- None

Birthplace- Teletubbyland

Occupation- children’s party entertainer

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- energy beam, transmission intercept, transmission replay, object teleport

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#5

Personality- Kehko is childlike and bubbly with a good moral compass. She is generally care-free, but is always eager to help her allies in a crisis. Her appearance and demeanor make her seem like much less of a challenge than she really is. Her excitement, along with her style of speaking, sometimes makes her speech hard to understand.

Appearance- Kehko is a female Teletubby. She has beige fur except on her face, which has a skin tone many would describe as “Caucasian”. She has an antenna topped with a “K”, large ears with rounded tips, a button nose, a human-like mouth, eyes with dark brown sclera, a line around her neck, a zipper-like marking on her back, a television screen on her abdomen, and a large, round posterior. Her hands are like mittens and her feet resemble boots with circular patterns on the grey soles. She usually doesn’t wear a costume, but she occasionally wears a green skirt.

Entry- One day, The Loser League encountered Kehko the Superpower Teletubby. Learning of her power and good moral compass, and learning she had nowhere else to go, they invited her to join the Loser League. Kehko is young and bubbly, but she is deceptively powerful. Many criminals have gotten too close to the crime-fighting alien creature, only to wind up getting struck by an energy beam!

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Kehko has the ability to fire energy beams, a unique power for Teletubbies. She can intercept television signals through her antenna and replay them on the screen in her abdomen. She can also teleport objects to her, even if they’re far away. Many people are uneasy around her and don’t want to be in her presence.

Weaknesses- Kehko is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


  • Kehko was inspired by the British children’s show Teletubbies. I thought it would be funny to have a Teletubby that shot energy beams (I think the writers of The Simpsons also had the same idea for an episode). The character may have also been inspired by Pokémon which are deceptively powerful, like Pikachu or Psyduck. Teletubbies often had objects, such as mirrors, watering cans, or crowns, suddenly appearing from “far away”, which is why I gave her the power of apportation.
  • Her name is based on the Teletubby greeting “Eh-oh!”

Raidra (talk) 00:40, April 11, 2015 (UTC)

The Gum-Chewing Vampiress

Secret identity- Bloodshadow

Birthplace- Sangrika

Occupation- repossessor

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- stealth, transform, heightened abilities & senses, flight, strength, combat skill, hypnosis, intangibility

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#1

Hobbies- collecting figurines

Personality- As The Chain-Smoking Vampiress, she was somewhat lackadaisical and self-absorbed, though she was still effective at performing her duties. She was also shown to be vengeful as she used her powers to fill Shawn Phlegm with terror before quitting her job. When told she had to quit smoking, and that it would be harder than quitting blood, she became worried about her health and future. It was in this state that she ran into Goblin Robin, who could see that she needed help and that she had some decency in her. Moved by his kind heart and encouragement, she forsook her evil ways, later becoming his girlfriend and teammate, The Gum-Chewing Vampiress. The two have similar personality traits as they enjoy playing with their foes, employ guerilla tactics at times, and have surprisingly good hearts. The Gum-Chewing Vampiress sometimes feels like an outsider, but she is now more open.

Appearance- The Gum-Chewing Vampiress is a female chureltercor. This means that she is half churel, a kind of Sangrikan, and half Spectercor, the final transformation of Spookor, the phantom morph Arakorph. She has pale skin which is a tone many would describe as either “Caucasian” or “Asian”, long, wavy, black hair, rounded ears, a human-like face with a mouth with elongated canines, and eyes with black irises and white pupils. Each hand has four curved, clawed fingers and a curved, clawed thumb while each foot has three clawed toes. She wears a gray dress with a dark red belt, black cape and sunglasses, and reddish-brown, short-heeled boots.

Entry- The Gum-Chewing Vampiress is not truly a vampire but a chureltercor, half alien creature called a churel, half Spectercor. At one point, she developed a serious addiction to blood. She overcame it, but later became addicted to nicotine. Dubbed “The Chain-Smoking Vampiress”, she became an assistant to Shawn Phlegm. However, she became more and more dissatisfied, feeling Shawn didn’t respect her. One day, her doctor told her to quit smoking or she might die. After Shawn refused to give her money for nicotine patches, she used her hypnotic powers to fill him with terror, then quit. Goblin Robin found her upset and helped her overcome her habit. She was surprised by his warm heart, and the two grew close. After she reformed and became The Gum-Chewing Vampiress, they began dating. Shortly afterward, she joined the Loser League. She now uses her great power to combat crime and injustice.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- The Gum-Chewing Vampiress has heightened abilities and senses and the powers of flight, hypnosis, and intangibility. She can morph into any creature, even Spookor transformations (although she cannot make herself look like any particular creature). She is very strong and stealthy and is a good fighter.

Weaknesses- The Gum-Chewing Vampiress is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.). Due to her previous blood addiction, The Gum-Chewing Vampiress must be careful if she has to be around blood.


  • The Gum-Chewing Vampiress was created after I found a pair of plastic vampire fangs. They were brown so I joked that they must’ve been from a chain-smoking vampire. It took off from there.
  • I view The Gum-Chewing Vampiress’s blood addiction like a heroin addiction and Izanagi’s more like alcoholism.


Secret identity- Da Lamula

Birthplace- Caesarante

Occupation- pianist

List of powers, abilities, and weapons- agility, endurance, strength, intelligence, heightened smelling, weapons jacket

Status- member of the Loser League, member of Shophetim

First appearance- LL#9

Catchphrases and Mottos- Jimmy Durante catchphrases and song lyrics

Personality- The song “Umbriago” says, “When you worry/Better send for Umbriago in a hurry.” This is also true of Umbriago the Loser Leaguer, who is energetic, trustworthy, and diligent. Her dependability and willingness to do what needs to be done make her a “closer” of sorts for the team. She is known for being a big fan of Jimmy Durante, often using his catchphrases and speech patterns. In addition to having a big nose, gravelly voice, and musical talent, Umbriago also shares Durante’s good heart and self-deprecating sense of humor.

Appearance- Umbriago is a female black Caesaranten. She has coal black fur except for her white face, hands, and feet. She has long black hair, fairly long ears which taper to rounded tips, a long snout which slopes near the tip and is filled with fangs, including large, jutting canines, eyes with reddish-brown sclera, and a tail which hangs down and has a tuft of white fur on the end. Her snout is even longer than that of the average Caesaranten. Each of her human-like hands has four curved fingers and a curved thumb while each hoof-like foot has two curving, clawed toes at the front and a curved, clawed toe on the back of the heel. She wears a reddish-brown jacket with a peach vest. She sometimes wears a light brown hat as well. At times she has a chew stick (a flavored stick that people chew on, but don’t eat) in her mouth.

Entry- Da Lamula is an energetic and talented Caesaranten who is such a big fan of the late comedian/pianist/singer/actor Jimmy Durante that she chose “Umbriago”, the name of both a song from Music for Millions and a puppet on Durante’s radio show, as her crime-fighting alias. However, she sometimes uses both names while fighting crime. When there is trouble, she rides to the scene on her bicycle. She is diligent in her battle against crime and makes a strong and trustworthy ally. Like Durante, Umbriago has a gravelly voice. Due to her huge fangs, she, like other Caesarantens, speaks with a lisp as well.

Description of powers, abilities, and weapons- Umbriago has a great degree of agility and endurance and is quite strong. She has good night vision and can blend into dark areas. She is quite smart with a good memory and a keen sense of smell. Her jacket has various weapons and other items.

Weaknesses- Umbriago is susceptible to the same weaknesses as an ordinary person (extreme temperatures, poison gas, etc.).


  • I decided to create Umbriago after watching the musical number of the same name from the movie Music for Millions. I’ve been interested in Jimmy Durante for a long time thanks to the caricatures in old cartoons, and my interest has blossomed into full fanship in recent years. The song “Umbriago” describes the title character as half a man and half a clown. This made me decide to base Umbriago on a monkey (specifically the black & white colobus). She has a long snout because Jimmy Durante was known for his big nose, and her donkey-like feet and tail are references to Durante’s gravelly voice. Her outfit is based on that of an Umbriago puppet from the 1940s.
  • The name “Da Lamula” is from a rejected character named “The Lamula”.
  • The name of Umbriago’s planet, “Caesarante”, is a reference to Irving Caesar and Jimmy Durante, who wrote many of Durante’s songs.
  • Caricatures of Durante in the old Warner Brothers cartoons often used “Umbriago!” as an interjection, so Umbriago does too. This means that in addition to being quite possibly the only superheroine in history to have been inspired by a Durante song, she’s also quite possibly the only superheroine to use her own alias as an interjection.

Well, that's the roster! All that's left to do is post the pictures. I'm only half-finished with the entries for the members of LEAK (the Loser League foes), but I might eventually post them too. Raidra (talk) 01:16, April 12, 2015 (UTC)

Some Recent News On One My Stories

Sir Ayme had just completed a narration of one of my best pastas, hopefully it will get some notice on YouTube. >

The Silent Audience ~ A Historical Note ~ By Mmpratt99 ~ Sir Ayme-2

The Silent Audience ~ A Historical Note ~ By Mmpratt99 ~ Sir Ayme-2

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 22:21, April 11, 2015 (UTC)

RE: New Message Some Recent News On One My Stories

Hey Tyber! Nice to hear from you again. I really hope this new Star Wars movie is worth all the hype and is just as good as the three originals. I'll probably not see it when it comes to the big screen to me having so many projects to wrap up also.

I did two more stories as well as a beginning prologue draft in Writer's Workshop if you're interested in taking a look>

The Old Gardner Place


The Last Day of October (Redone Prologue)

Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 03:03, April 21, 2015 (UTC)

Re: Thanks

Man, they'll celebrate anything these days... Joking, thanks for the support. It's trying at times, but I do enjoy it (mostly). Make sure to drop a line to Jay ten and Underscorre as they're both Admins and putting in more work than me. Have a good one. EmpyrealInvective (talk) 22:19, April 22, 2015 (UTC)

May the fourth be with you

I just wanted to say- oh, wait, I pretty much said it in the title. Well, take care! Raidra (talk) 15:50, May 4, 2015 (UTC)

Submissions For Narration

Are you still accepting stories on your Narration blog or has that fallen by the wayside?

Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 16:28, July 27, 2015 (UTC)

Request For Critique

I have just completed the latest chapter in The Last Day of October series. If you have time to review this story, I would very much like to hear some feedback from you. The Last Day of October--Short Hoggers

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 01:45, October 22, 2015 (UTC)

A Lot Has Happened

Sometimes, I don't even think I am human.  I actually witnessed some Hispanic teenage girl jump from the bridge on December 10th, 2015.  There were tons of cop cars on the nearby ramp and I and my caregiver were on our way to Walmart, which had a bank inside.  I should have had a nightmare, somehow I connect them with horrific things that happen.  I should have had a nightmare to stop that girl from jumping off the bridge and into the traffic below.  As if, I could have done anything to stop that.  I don't know, maybe she's dead or in severe agony.  

Maybe, I am insane, because I didn't break down sobbing.  I was just shocked.  As if that matters, I should have broken down sobbing, instead of being shocked some sort of moron.  Am I a sociopath?  Maybe, my ramblings, shock and slight tears are all fake.  I have been told before that I cry crocodile tears.

Anyways, it's snowing pretty badly outside and I don't know if the buses are running today, Sunday.  I am wearing a heavy sweater and I really want a heavy winter coat.  I gotta save up my cash for one.  I need to stop switching topics.

I hope you're doing all right, sorry for being absent.

Hellhound iscariot666 (talk) 14:21, December 13, 2015 (UTC)

How is it going this Easter?  I haven't spoken with anyone on here in a while.  Hellhound iscariot666 (talk) 00:22, March 28, 2016 (UTC)

Weird Computer Problem

Hi, sorry if it has been some time. My computer is doing some weird shit. When I exited out of a video, the audio still continued. I then closed out of all of my tabs, yet the audio still continued. I did manage to restart my computer. Firefox, the program that I use is such a bitch.

I have had this problem for ages now and it really freaks me out. It is just like that armless porcelain ballerina that is seen in my profile picture. Ugh, why does weird crap like that happen to me?

I am twenty-four and have had this computer since I was eighteen.

Hellhound iscariot666 (talk) 01:06, December 30, 2016 (UTC)

Revamping an Old Story in Need of Critique

Summer Break (Realistic Version) --Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 01:38, August 5, 2017 (UTC)

We'd love to hear from you if you have the time. Raidra (talk) 13:40, August 5, 2017 (UTC)

Hey Tyber

This is Mmpratt99 again. Haven't heard from you awhile Just wondering if you're still on Creepypasta?

--Mmpratt99 deviantart (talk) 18:16, December 27, 2017 (UTC)

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